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Original:  Option B: Protagonist in the Dark center|317x317px|Option B: Protagonist in the dark What happens if the Audience, the Antagonist or other Characters know what is happening but The Protagonist is left in the dark ? An effective way to do this is to endanger the protagonist without their knowledge.
Revised:  Option B: Protagonist in the Dark Often, the audience and a specific character are aware of all the information in a scene, but the protagonist is left in the dark ? An effective way to do this is to endanger the protagonist without their knowledge.
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Original:   This explains why people talk (scream even) to the screen to warn the Protagonist of impending danger even though the character cannot hear them.
Revised:  This explains why people talk to the screen to warn the Protagonist of impending danger even though the character cannot hear them.
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Original:  It is important to note that the Protagonist cannot be left in the dark for a long period of time because they carry the story.
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Original:  In Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid (1969) director William Goldman used this approach to excellent effect in the final scene.
Revised:  In Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid , director William Goldman used this approach to excellent effect in the final scene.
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Original:  In Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid (1969) director William Goldman used this approach to excellent effect in the final scene.
Revised:  In Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid (1969) director William Goldman kept the protagonists in the dark in the final scene.
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Original:  Butch and Sundance are engaging on trivial banter unaware of an army gearing up weaponry to attack them.
Revised:  Butch and Sundance engage on trivial banter unaware of an army gearing up weaponry to attack them.
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Original:  Butch and Sundance are engaging on trivial banter unaware of an army gearing up weaponry to attack them.
Revised:  Butch and Sundance are engaging on trivial banter , unaware that an army is gearing up to attack them.
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Original:  As the audience , we want Butch and Sundance to stop talking about how to pick up women in Australia and prepare to take on an entire army.
Revised:  However, the audience knows because Goldman shows the army preparing.Goldman, William. Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid. Film. United States: Twentieth Century Fox Film Corp., 1969.
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Original:  We, the audience , see the car crash coming and we can’t look away. center|368x368px The film Donnie Brasco capitalizes on this approach , telling the story of an undercover cop ( Donnie ) infiltrating the mob through his friendship with gangster Lefty Ruggiero.
Revised:  We, the audience , see the car crash coming and we can’t look away. center|368x368px The film Donnie Brasco capitalizes on this approach , telling the story of an undercover cop ( Brasco ) infiltrating the mob through his friendship with gangster Lefty Ruggiero.
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Original:  This makes even the most mundane scene interesting because underneath the routine conversation lies our deep-seated interest in watching Donnie make his way into the mafia’s inner sanctum.
Revised:  This creates tension in even the most mundane scene interesting because underneath the routine conversation lies our deep-seated interest in watching Donnie make his way into the mafia’s inner sanctum.
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Original:  This makes even the most mundane scene interesting because underneath the routine conversation lies our deep-seated interest in watching Donnie make his way into the mafia’s inner sanctum.
Revised:  This makes even the most mundane scenes because underneath the routine conversation lies our deep-seated interest in watching Donnie make his way into the mafia’s inner sanctum.
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Original:  This makes even the most mundane scene interesting because underneath the routine conversation lies our deep-seated interest in watching Donnie make his way into the mafia’s inner sanctum.
Revised:  This makes even the most mundane scene interesting because underneath the routine conversation lies the audience's deep-seated interest in watching Donnie make his way into the mafia’s inner sanctum.
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Original:  In his 1992 draft, Paul Attanasio wrote a scene where Donnie talks about birds, when really all we can think about is whether Lefty is really going to let Donnie become a wiseguy.
Revised:  Ebert, Roger. “Donnie Brasco Movie Review
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Original:  The Storyteller’s Parallax The Storyteller’s Parallax is an additional layer to the Triangle of Knowledge .
Revised:  The Storyteller’s Parallax The Storyteller’s Parallax is an amelioration of the Triangle of Knowledge .
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Storyteller [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller – Character X [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room written by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster illustrates Parallax A . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who move to a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller  [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster  . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " Panic Room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
Revised:  Protagonist – Storyteller [Parallax A] Audience – Character X – Storyteller [Parallax B] %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Storyteller – Protagonist – Character X [Parallax C] 390x390px|Triangle of Knowledge The Panic Room Consider the 2002 psychological thriller Panic Room directed by David Koepp and starring Jody Foster . Panic Room is the story of a mother (Meg) and daughter (Sarah) who just moved into a new house – one with a " panic room " where people can safely hide in case of emergency.
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Original:  Three men (Junior, Raoul and Burnham) break into the house and try to get into the Panic Room where the two women are hiding.
Revised:  Three men break into the house and try to get into the Panic Room where the two women are hiding.
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Original:  Three men (Junior, Raoul and Burnham) break into the house and try to get into the Panic Room where the two women are hiding.
Revised:  Three men (Junior, Raoul and Burnham) break into the house and try to get into the panic room where the two women are hiding.
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Original:  At the end of Act I, the director DavidFincher creates tension by using the Storyteller’s Parallax by keeping the Antagonist’s in the dark about the mobile phone that could save Meg and Sarah.
Revised:  Fincher, David. Panic Room. Film. United States: Sony Pictures , 2002. Director David Fincher utilizes the Storyteller’s Parallax by keeping the Antagonist’s in the dark about the mobile phone that could save Meg and Sarah.
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Original:  who tries to get the money back. center|397x397px| Story Shape #1 for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% The second story follows Sheriff Bell,
Revised:  who tries to get the money back. center|397x397px| %DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% The second story follows Sheriff Bell,
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Original:  and tracking down Moss to try to save his life. center|355x355px| Story Shape #2 for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% The third story is that of Sheriff Bell who would like to hold to the essence of his father as a law enforcement officer who served in a world where there was justice and good won over evil. center|386x386px|%DIFDELCMD < [ %%% Act I and II Story Shape for No Country for Old Men We as the audience have clues for the possible endings to the story,
Revised:  and tracking down Moss to try to save his life. center|355x355px| %DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% The third story is that of Sheriff Bell who would like to hold to the essence of his father as a law enforcement officer who served in a world where there was justice and good won over evil. center|386x386px|%DIFDELCMD < [ %%% Act I and II Story Shape for No Country for Old Men We as the audience have clues for the possible endings to the story,
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Original:  and tracking down Moss to try to save his life. center|355x355px| Story Shape #2 for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% The third story is that of Sheriff Bell who would like to hold to the essence of his father as a law enforcement officer who served in a world where there was justice and good won over evil. center|386x386px|%DIFDELCMD < [ %%% Act I and II Story Shape for No Country for Old Men We as the audience have clues for the possible endings to the story,
Revised:  and tracking down Moss to try to save his life. center|355x355px| Story Shape #2 for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% center|386x386px|%DIFDELCMD < [ %%% Act I and II Story Shape for No Country for Old Men We as the audience have clues for the possible endings to the story,
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Original:  and tracking down Moss to try to save his life. center|355x355px| Story Shape #2 for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% The third story is that of Sheriff Bell who would like to hold to the essence of his father as a law enforcement officer who served in a world where there was justice and good won over evil. center|386x386px|%DIFDELCMD < [ %%% Act I and II Story Shape for No Country for Old Men We as the audience have clues for the possible endings to the story,
Revised:  and tracking down Moss to try to save his life. center|355x355px| Story Shape #2 for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% The third story is that of Sheriff Bell who would like to hold to the essence of his father as a law enforcement officer who served in a world where there was justice and good won over evil. %DIFDELCMD < [ %%% Act I and II Story Shape for No Country for Old Men We as the audience have clues for the possible endings to the story,
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Original: %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% center|390x390px| Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% In one scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers created a false tension by first showing Chirgur behind the door while Sheriff Bell contemplates the risk of opening the motel room.
Revised: %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% In one scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers created a false tension by first showing Chirgur behind the door while Sheriff Bell contemplates the risk of opening the motel room.
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Original: %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% center|390x390px| Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men%DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% In one scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers created a false tension by first showing Chirgur behind the door while Sheriff Bell contemplates the risk of opening the motel room.
Revised: %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% center|390x390px| %DIFDELCMD < ] %DIFDELCMD < %%% In one scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers created a false tension by first showing Chirgur behind the door while Sheriff Bell contemplates the risk of opening the motel room.
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Original:  336x336px|The three minds that have knowledge in a screenplay |alt=|left
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Original:  The forth element of consideration is the Storyteller herself.
Revised:  The fourth element of consideration is the Storyteller herself.
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Original: De Wet Nel is a South African politician serving as a Member of North West Provincial Legislature for the Freedom Front Plus since May 2019.
Revised: De Wet Nel is a South African politician who has served as a Member of North West Provincial Legislature for the Freedom Front Plus since May 2019.
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Original:  He served as a councillor of the Rustenburg Local Municipality and  the chairperson of the municipality's municipal public accounts committee until his election to the North West Provincial Legislature in May 2019.
Revised:  He served as a councillor of the Rustenburg Local Municipality and as the chairperson of the municipality's municipal public accounts committee until his election to the North West Provincial Legislature in May 2019.
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Original:   References
Revised:  He later resigned and was replaced by the DA's Jacqueline Theologo. References
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Original:  After  Matura in Solothurn  he studied musicology with Arnold Geering and Lucie Dikenmann-Balmer and languages at the University of Bern.
Revised:  After obtaining his Matura in Solothurn he studied musicology with Arnold Geering and Lucie Dikenmann-Balmer and languages at the University of Bern.
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Original:  After  Matura in Solothurn  he studied musicology with Arnold Geering and Lucie Dikenmann-Balmer and languages at the University of Bern.
Revised:  After Matura in Solothurn , he studied musicology with Arnold Geering and Lucie Dikenmann-Balmer and languages at the University of Bern.
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Original: In 1969  he became a teacher of theory at the Winterthur Conservatory.
Revised: In 1969 , he became a teacher of theory at the Winterthur Conservatory.
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Original: Abdu Gusau, Garkuwan Sokoto, MBE, OON, was a Nigerian civil engineer, and statesman that served as the Garkuwa of Sokoto until his death in 1994.
Revised: Abdu Gusau, Garkuwan Sokoto, MBE, OON, was a Nigerian civil engineer, and statesman who served as the Garkuwa of Sokoto until his death in 1994.
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Original:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967-1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design  construction),  campus road network and  water supply.
Revised:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967 to 1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design construction), campus road network and water supply.
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Original:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967-1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design  construction),  campus road network and  water supply.
Revised:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967-1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design and construction), campus road network and water supply.
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Original:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967-1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design  construction),  campus road network and  water supply.
Revised:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967-1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design construction), the campus road network and water supply.
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Original:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967-1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design  construction),  campus road network and  water supply.
Revised:  He was the Chief estate engineer of Ahmadu Bello University, Zaria from 1967-1972 where he was in charge of estates, which included buildings (both design construction), campus road network and the water supply.
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Original:  Gusau also served as a principal engineer with Taylor Woodrow of London where he worked on building London heathrow 's airport terminal.
Revised:  Gusau also served as a principal engineer with Taylor Woodrow of London where he worked on building London Heathrow 's airport terminal.
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Original:  Gusau was the civil commissioner for the now defunct North western state Nigeria from 1972 – 1975.
Revised:  Gusau was the civil commissioner for the now defunct North western state Nigeria from 1972 to 1975.
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Original: He was born on the 15 July 1918 in the town of Gusau in present-day Zamfara state.
Revised: He was born on 15 July 1918 in the town of Gusau in present-day Zamfara state.
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Original:  He attended elementary school at Gusau 1927-1930 and then went on to middle school in Sokoto  1930 – 1935.
Revised:  He attended elementary school at Gusau from 1927 to 1930 and then went on to middle school in Sokoto 1930 – 1935.
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Original:  He attended elementary school at Gusau 1927-1930 and then went on to middle school in Sokoto  1930 – 1935.
Revised:  He attended elementary school at Gusau 1927-1930 and then went on to middle school in Sokoto from 1930 – 1935.
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Original:  He attended elementary school at Gusau 1927-1930 and then went on to middle school in Sokoto  1930 – 1935.
Revised:  He attended elementary school at Gusau 1927-1930 and then went on to middle school in Sokoto 1930 to 1935.
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