wanyu/IteraTeR_v2 huggingface dataset:
Original:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4)  o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4)  Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24  Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are  bcp and brown lines are  bond paths.
Revised:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranes !P-Sb bonding !o-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4) Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24 Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are bcp and brown lines are bond paths.
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Original:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4)  o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4)  Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24  Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are  bcp and brown lines are  bond paths.
Revised:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ! o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4) Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24 Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are bcp and brown lines are bond paths.
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Original:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4)  o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4)  Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24  Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are  bcp and brown lines are  bond paths.
Revised:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4) Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24 Contour plots of the Laplacian of the electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are bcp and brown lines are bond paths.
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Original:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4)  o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4)  Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24  Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are  bcp and brown lines are  bond paths.
Revised:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4) Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24 Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are bcp and brown lines are bond paths.
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Original:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4)  o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4)  Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24  Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are  bcp and brown lines are  bond paths.
Revised:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4) Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24 Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are bcp and brown lines are bond paths.
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Original:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4)  o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4)  Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24  Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are  bcp and brown lines are  bond paths.
Revised:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4) Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24 Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are the bcp and brown lines are bond paths.
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Original:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4)  o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4)  Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24  Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are  bcp and brown lines are  bond paths.
Revised:  { +AIM analysis of the intramolecular donor-acceptor interactions of two stiboranesP-Sb bondingo-C6H4 (PPh2)(Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) o-C6H4(PPh2)(Sb(C6H5)2(O2C6Cl4) Electron density at the bcp (e/rBohr3) 0.0540.035Delocalization index0.380.24 Contour plots of Laplacian of electron density of (left) (o-C6H4(PPh2) ( [ Sb(C6F5)2(O2C6Cl4) ] and (right) ( o-C6H4(PPh2) [ (SbPh2(O2C6Cl4) ] . Blue dots are bcp and brown lines are the bond paths.
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Original: |center|649x649px ]] Electrostatic potential map of a bis-antimony (V) complex (9).
Revised: |center|649x649px ]] Electrostatic potential map of a bisantimony (V) complex (9).
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Original: |365x365px Bis-antimony compounds vs mono-antimony compounds A bis-antimony complex (9) is a stronger Lewis acid than a mono-antimony compound (8) because both Lewis acidic sites cooperatively contribute to the Lewis base binding.
Revised: |365x365px Bisantimony compounds vs mono-antimony compounds A bis-antimony complex (9) is a stronger Lewis acid than a mono-antimony compound (8) because both Lewis acidic sites cooperatively contribute to the Lewis base binding.
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Original: |365x365px Bis-antimony compounds vs mono-antimony compounds A bis-antimony complex (9) is a stronger Lewis acid than a mono-antimony compound (8) because both Lewis acidic sites cooperatively contribute to the Lewis base binding.
Revised: |365x365px Bis-antimony compounds vs mono-antimony compounds A bisantimony complex (9) is a stronger Lewis acid than a mono-antimony compound (8) because both Lewis acidic sites cooperatively contribute to the Lewis base binding.
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Original: |365x365px Bis-antimony compounds vs mono-antimony compounds A bis-antimony complex (9) is a stronger Lewis acid than a mono-antimony compound (8) because both Lewis acidic sites cooperatively contribute to the Lewis base binding.
Revised: |365x365px Bis-antimony compounds vs mono-antimony compounds A bis-antimony complex (9) is a stronger Lewis acid than a monoantimony compound (8) because both Lewis acidic sites cooperatively contribute to the Lewis base binding.
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Original:  The electrostatic potential map of 9 shows positive charges on  Sb centers facing each other.
Revised:  The electrostatic potential map of 9 shows positive charges on the Sb centers facing each other.
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Original:  This cooperativity is supported by the Sb-(μ-F)-Sb moiety in solid state structure of F− binding bis-anitimony compound 9.
Revised:  This cooperativity is supported by the Sb-(μ-F)-Sb moiety in solid state structure of F− binding bisantimony compound 9.
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Original:  Fluoride anion sensor Owing to their high fluoride ion affinity, Lewis acidic antimony compounds may be utilized in fluoride anion sensing.  9-anthryltriphenylstibonium cation (5) shows weak  emission (Φ = 0.7\%), but a corresponding fluoride adduct, fluorostiborane, shows  strong anthryl-based emission at 427 nm (Φ = 9.5\% in CHCl3).
Revised:  Fluoride anion sensor Owing to their high fluoride ion affinity, Lewis acidic antimony compounds may be utilized in fluoride anion sensing. The 9-anthryltriphenylstibonium cation (5) shows weak emission (Φ = 0.7\%), but a corresponding fluoride adduct, fluorostiborane, shows strong anthryl-based emission at 427 nm (Φ = 9.5\% in CHCl3).
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Original:  Fluoride anion sensor Owing to their high fluoride ion affinity, Lewis acidic antimony compounds may be utilized in fluoride anion sensing.  9-anthryltriphenylstibonium cation (5) shows weak  emission (Φ = 0.7\%), but a corresponding fluoride adduct, fluorostiborane, shows  strong anthryl-based emission at 427 nm (Φ = 9.5\% in CHCl3).
Revised:  Fluoride anion sensor Owing to their high fluoride ion affinity, Lewis acidic antimony compounds may be utilized in fluoride anion sensing. 9-anthryltriphenylstibonium cation (5) shows weak emission (Φ = 0.7\%), but a corresponding fluoride adduct, fluorostiborane, shows a strong anthryl-based emission at 427 nm (Φ = 9.5\% in CHCl3).
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Original:  Owing to its fluorescence turn-on response to fluoride binding, as little as 1 ppm of F− can be detected with naked eyes , which have not been achieved by previously reported fluorescent boron compounds with high FIA. center|364x364px|Fluoride binding turns on emission.
Revised:  Owing to its fluorescence turn-on response to fluoride binding, as little as 1 ppm of F− can be detected with the naked eye , which have not been achieved by previously reported fluorescent boron compounds with high FIA. center|364x364px|Fluoride binding turns on emission.
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Original:  Strongly acidic antimony compounds are able to catalyze organic transformations ( e.g. the transfer hydrogenation and the Ritter reaction).
Revised:  Strongly acidic antimony compounds are able to catalyze organic transformations ( such as the transfer hydrogenation and the Ritter reaction).
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Original:  Tetraaryl stibonium cations catalyze cycloadditions between epoxides and CO2 or isocyanate to produce oxazolidinones.
Revised:  Tetraarylstibonium cations catalyze cycloadditions between epoxides and CO2 or isocyanate to produce oxazolidinones.
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Original:  Strong electron donation from gold to antimony decreases electron density on gold center and the gold-antimony complex catalyzes (top) hydroamination and (bottom) polymerization of olefin.
Revised:  Strong electron donation from gold to antimony decreases electron density on the Au center and the gold-antimony complex catalyzes (top) hydroamination and (bottom) polymerization of olefin.
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Original: Dustinn Craig is a Native-American filmmaker and skateboarder of White Mountain Apache and Navajo descent  .
Revised: Dustinn Craig is a Native-American filmmaker and skateboarder . Craig is an enrolled member of the White Mountain Apache and Navajo descent .
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Original: Dustinn Craig is a Native-American filmmaker and skateboarder of White Mountain Apache and Navajo descent  .
Revised: Dustinn Craig is a Native-American filmmaker and skateboarder of White Mountain Apache Tribe. .
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Original:  In 2009, Craig released Our Home, Our Stories: Short Films by Dustinn Craig, a compilation broadcasted on Arizona Public Television . Skateboarding As of 2020, Craig is leader of the White Mountain skate team.
Revised:  In 2009, Craig released Our Home, Our Stories: Short Films by Dustinn Craig, a compilation broadcasted on Arizona Public Television Skateboarding As of 2020, Craig is leader of the White Mountain skate team.
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Original:  Category:1970 births Category:Living people Category:Gujarati people Category:Indian civil servants Category:Indian government officials Category:Central Secretariat Service officers Category:Accountants Category:Indian diploma 
Revised:  Category:1970 births Category:Living people Category:Gujarati people Category:Indian civil servants Category:Indian government officials Category:Central Secretariat Service officers Category:Accountants Category:Indian diplomats 
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Original: thumb Transworld Associates%DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Transworld: Pakistan’s Backbone For International Connectivity Transworld is a joint venture of Orascom Telecom Media and Technology Holding S. A.E, Orastar and His Excellency Dr Omar Abdul Mone’m Yousuf Al Zawawi of Sultanate of Oman.
Revised:  Transworld Associates%DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Transworld: Pakistan’s Backbone For International Connectivity Transworld is a joint venture of Orascom Telecom Media and Technology Holding S. A.E, Orastar and His Excellency Dr Omar Abdul Mone’m Yousuf Al Zawawi of Sultanate of Oman.
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Original: thumb Transworld Associates%DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Transworld: Pakistan’s Backbone For International Connectivity Transworld is a joint venture of Orascom Telecom Media and Technology Holding S. A.E, Orastar and His Excellency Dr Omar Abdul Mone’m Yousuf Al Zawawi of Sultanate of Oman.
Revised: thumb %DIFDELCMD < %DIFDELCMD < %%% Transworld: Pakistan’s Backbone For International Connectivity Transworld is a joint venture of Orascom Telecom Media and Technology Holding S. A.E, Orastar and His Excellency Dr Omar Abdul Mone’m Yousuf Al Zawawi of Sultanate of Oman.
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Original:  Our points of presence in international markets like Germany, France and Singapore ensures the lowest latency for our customers . Transworld is perfectly synchronized to the global Internet peering ecosystem via direct connectivity to content providers such as Google, Facebook, Akamai, Netflix, Amazon and several others which makes the customer experience a faster internet.
Revised:  Our points of presence in international markets like Germany, France and Singapore ensures the lowest latency for our customers . 
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Original:  IP Transit The transfer of information in today ’ s world has become a critical success factor for organizations and individuals.
Revised:  The Storyteller ’ s world has become a critical success factor for organizations and individuals.
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Original:  Transworld ’ s DDoS Mitigation Service uses Attack Detection and Attack Mitigation Systems located at Transworld’ s Internet gateway, to analyze, identify and discard malicious DDoS attack traffic generating from Internet before it reaches a customer ’ s port.
Revised:  Transworld ’ s Internet gateway, to analyze, identify and discard malicious DDoS attack traffic generating from Internet before it reaches a customer ’ s port.
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Original:  Transworld Home ]  ]  Transworld Subsidiaries ]  Transworld Enterprise Services (TES) Transworld Enterprise Services (TES), operational as Transworld Home was incorporated in 2011 and is the wholly owned subsidiary of Tier-1 Operator Transworld Associates URL It is the only company backed by Tier-1 international network operator in Pakistan.
Revised:  Transworld Home ] ] Transworld Subsidiaries ] 
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Original:  For the first time in Pakistan Transworld Home provides unlimited downloads​, abundant bandwidth to connect several devices such as smartphones, tablets, laptops, PCs and Smart TVs ]  . External links Tyco Telecommunications completes TWA-1 undersea cable system Transworld Associates Transworld Enterprise Services (TES) URL Category:Telecommunications companies of Pakist
Revised:  For the first time in Pakistan Transworld Home provides unlimited downloads​, abundant bandwidth to connect several devices such as smartphones, tablets, laptops, PCs and Smart TVs ] . Category:Telecommunications companies of Pakist
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Original:  The three minds include The Protagonist, another Character in the scene and the audience watching the scene.
Revised:  The three minds include The Protagonist, another Character in the scene and the Audience watching the scene.
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Original:  See image below. center|336x336px|The three minds that have knowledge in a screenplay In Leaving Las Vegas Screenwriter /director Mike Figgis keeps the audience in the dark revealing just enough details to make Protagonist stand out.
Revised:  See image below. center|336x336px|The three minds that have knowledge in a screenplay In Leaving Las Vegas , screenwriter /director Mike Figgis keeps the audience in the dark revealing just enough details to make Protagonist stand out.
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Original:  In Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid (1969)  William Goldman used this approach to excellent effect in the final scene.
Revised:  In Butch Cassidy and the Sundance Kid (1969) director William Goldman used this approach to excellent effect in the final scene.
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Original:  We are in on the joke and watch Character (s) act upon incomplete information.
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Original:  In his 1992 draft, Paul Attanasio writes a scene where Donnie talks about birds, when really all we can think about is whether Lefty is really going to let Donnie become a Wiseguy .
Revised:  In his 1992 draft, Paul Attanasio wrote a scene where Donnie talks about birds, when really all we can think about is whether Lefty is really going to let Donnie become a Wiseguy .
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Original:  In his 1992 draft, Paul Attanasio writes a scene where Donnie talks about birds, when really all we can think about is whether Lefty is really going to let Donnie become a Wiseguy .
Revised:  In his 1992 draft, Paul Attanasio writes a scene where Donnie talks about birds, when really all we can think about is whether Lefty is really going to let Donnie become a wiseguy .
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Original:  We as the audience also know that she needs the mobile phone to get help. center|390x390px|[Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men] In the last scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers create tension by having Chirgur behind the door and Sheriff Bell contemplating the risk of opening the motel room.
Revised:  We as the audience also know that she needs the mobile phone to get help. center|390x390px|[Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men] In one scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers create tension by having Chirgur behind the door and Sheriff Bell contemplating the risk of opening the motel room.
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Original:  We as the audience also know that she needs the mobile phone to get help. center|390x390px|[Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men] In the last scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers create tension by having Chirgur behind the door and Sheriff Bell contemplating the risk of opening the motel room.
Revised:  We as the audience also know that she needs the mobile phone to get help. center|390x390px|[Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men] In the last scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers created a false tension by first showing Chirgur behind the door and Sheriff Bell contemplating the risk of opening the motel room.
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Original:  We as the audience also know that she needs the mobile phone to get help. center|390x390px|[Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men] In the last scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers create tension by having Chirgur behind the door and Sheriff Bell contemplating the risk of opening the motel room.
Revised:  We as the audience also know that she needs the mobile phone to get help. center|390x390px|[Final Story Shape for No Country for Old Men] In the last scene of No Country for Old Men, the Cohen brothers create tension by having Chirgur behind the door while Sheriff Bell contemplates the risk of opening the motel room.
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Original:  This drastically shifts the film to create an anagnorisis for the audience who quickly realize that this is not a story of justice for a Chigur or moral reconciliation for stolen loot but the story of an ‘old man’ displaced in the ambiguity of the new world that forces him to retire.
Revised:  This drastically shifts the film to create an anagnorisis for the audience who quickly realize that this is not a story of justice for Chigur or moral reconciliation for stolen loot but the story of an ‘old man’ displaced in the ambiguity of the new world that forces him to retire.
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Original:  This drastically shifts the film to create an anagnorisis for the audience who quickly realize that this is not a story of justice for a Chigur or moral reconciliation for stolen loot but the story of an ‘old man’ displaced in the ambiguity of the new world that forces him to retire.
Revised:  This drastically shifts the film to create an anagnorisis for the audience who quickly realize that this is not a story of justice for a Chigur or moral reconciliation for stolen loot . Instead, it is the story of an ‘old man’ displaced in the ambiguity of the new world that forces him to retire.
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Original: The Triangle of Knowledge is a teaching technique that best shows how to create and amplify tension in a screenplay .
Revised: The Triangle of Knowledge is a writing technique to create and amplify tension in a screenplay .
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Original:  To understand the Triangle of Knowledge (TOK) we look at a scene as ‘three minds’ that contain knowledge.
Revised:  . The Triangle represents ‘three minds’ that contain knowledge.
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Original:  See image below. center| 336x336px|The three minds that have knowledge in a screenplay  Option A: Audience in the Dark To create tension in a scene, we block information from one corner leaving the protagonist or the character(s) or the audience in the dark . Keeping the audience in the dark is the most familiar as is often used at the beginning of the film. center|345x345px|Option A: Audience in the Dark Consider a scene opening with a man in black suit seated on a black bench.
Revised:  See image below. center| 336x336px|The three minds that have knowledge in a screenplay Option A: Audience in the Dark To create tension , a writer may deprive the audience of information that the two characters in the scene posses . Keeping the audience in the dark is the most familiar as is often used at the beginning of the film. center|345x345px|Option A: Audience in the Dark Consider a scene opening with a man in black suit seated on a black bench.
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Original:  In Leaving Las Vegas, screenwriter/director Mike Figgis keeps the audience in the dark revealing just enough details to make Protagonist stand out.
Revised:  At the beginning of Leaving Las Vegas, screenwriter/director Mike Figgis keeps the audience in the dark revealing just enough details to make Protagonist stand out.
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Original:  A man donning a beat up expensive suit in an elite bar  leaves the audience curious about his story which leads them to an unknown journey where they discover that the protagonist (Ben)is a raging alcoholic .
Revised:  A man donning a beat up expensive suit in an elite bar , which leaves the audience curious about his story which leads them to an unknown journey where they discover that the protagonist (Ben)is a raging alcoholic .
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