Talk:Robin Friday

message: This looks like it has some pretty clear vandalism but I don't know enough about the system to go about removing it.  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 62.31.181.204 (talk) 14:47, 18 March 2009 (UTC)
replies: text: That's already included in the article. Kosack (talk) 23:41, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
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message: Hello, some ideas.
*I think it's perfectly reasonable to link association football because (for instance) I'm not sure our US readers know that this means soccer.
**Okay.
*He appeared to play for four pro youth teams, not mentioned in the lead at all...
**Okay.
*Friday was known for smoking... your implication here in this sentence is that he was better known for his exploits outside of the game, is that your intention?  Perhaps you could clarify it.  And it reads odd to start this with three or four extra-curricular activities and then "and his habit of unsettling opponents..." - he didn't do all of that on a Saturday afternoon did he?! (Perhaps he did!)
**Okay.
*"unsettling opponents through physical intimidation contributed to a heavily tarnished disciplinary record. However, his on-field performances were regarded" not wishing to labour the point but he could only have unsettled opponents on-field (in this context) so this isn't brilliantly written.
**Okay.
* début -> minor point but for some decades we've had "debut" in the English language without the accent.
**I like having the accent there, but that's just me, evidently. You're not the first to complain about my habit of using it. Off it comes.
*"The strongest parts of Friday's game" not keen on "parts", perhaps "qualities" or "components" or something.  My personal opinion though.
**"aspects"? I've put that in.
*" a notable difference was that Robin" perhaps "difference in their personalities was..." or something similar?
**"a noticeable difference in personality"?
*Is "bunking off" obvious to our non-UK readers?
**I thought it was obvious from context, but okay then.
*"season at 13 " maybe "aged 13" for variety?
**Alright.
*"attended the 1967 FA Cup Final as a youth player" unclear, could be misconstrued.  He merely went to watch I suspect?  so maybe, "as a youth player for Chelsea, he attended..."?  I don't know, it looks a little picky.  You get what I'm saying though?  
**He went with the club's official party, along with most of their youth players, to watch the final. I think it's pretty clear but I'll make it more so.
*"in each of these clubs losing patience with him." lost the clarity because the FA Cup final got in the way, no problem with restating QPR and Chelsea here I shouldn't think.
**I think that reads funny myself; it sounds like all of them lose patience at once if you put it like that. I've left this as it is.
*"was even better as a goalkeeper" no need for "even" here?
**Okay.
*"an Acton pub" not sure our universal public will understand pub without linking.
**Yep.
*"to the Hayes front line in October" nice writing, no doubt, but a shade unclear to non-experts.  Could you simplify a touch and just say he returned to the Hayes team?
**Okay.
*"having done his research on his background, he " confusing.  Maybe "having researched the player's background, he..."?
**Yah.
*"The 1972–73 season was Friday's most prolific non-League year in terms of goals.[11] Friday briefly joined Enfield ..." (a) how many?!! (b) "He briefly..." (no need to repeat Friday).
**a) The source don't tell us, I would have said if it did. b) Okay.
*"his amateurism meant that" sorry, I need this explaining.  Is it because he wasn't being paid by Reading?  Sorry for being dense.
**This was made clearer in a passage before which was taken out. I've made it much clearer now (at the end of the previous section)
*"was repeatedly fouled cynically" perhaps "repeatedly and cynically fouled..."?
**Okay.
*"favouring American Colt 45 lager," the link to colt 45 goes to malt liquor, not sure how this relates to lager?
**I had this issue before when writing it; in England it's sold as a lager, and it's not quite the same drink as the one marketed in the States, being a bit stronger in alcohol content. I went for lager in the end, though, because that's what the source calls it. I'll change it to "malt liquor", though, what the hell.
*"a rise from seventh the " maybe just "one place higher"
**Okay.
*"well during 1974–75. " never keen on this kind of thing in prose, I think wikilinks are to blame.  Why not "during the .. season"?
**Okay.
*Worth appropriate link to scout.
**Alright.
*"1974–75 season" section, minor criticism (although I know no better) sentences start as follows : After, By, Although, After, However, Although... I dunno, just seems a little "regretful".
**I see. I've changed it around a bit; what do you think?
*"much to Cumming's annoyance he then decided to keep them for himself.[59] With 22 goals for the year, 21 in the league," re-assert Friday at some point here!
**Okay.
*Wrexham is now just F.C., not A.F.C.
**Alrighty.
*"that if he didn't go to" contraction warning.
**Oops! Nice catch.
*"two stone in weight worth linking "stone" appropriately and converting for our metric friends.
**Okay.
*"second-to-last "-> penultimate?
**Zvakanaka.
The Rambling Man (talk) 18:51, 20 June 2011 (UTC)
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message: Super article now, thanks. One comment: "lose two stone (about 13.70 kg) in weight" - the metric conversion is incorrect (should be 12.7), and too accurate. "about 13 kg" would be better. Deadlock (talk) 15:34, 4 August 2011 (UTC)
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message: Onee of the best players I ever saw.
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