Talk:Isobel Miller Kuhn

message: This passage is problematic for several reasons. I made some changes, but Canihaveacookie reverted most of them.
Here are some observations.
:1."as many of her contemporaries were who were abandoning religion in that day of shifting religious climates" sounds like a personal opinion. It could be re-worded "as many of her fellow students were who were abandoning religion." Speaking about the religious climate of the country at the time of Kuhn's college years seems beyond the scope of this article. If some of her friends and acquaintances abandoned Christianity it is noteworthy that she was influenced to do the same, but this isn't the place for extra social commentary.
:2. "Kuhn was always seen with the right people and at the right parties and dances, according to her mother's upbringing of her." What does this mean, exactly? Were they "right" as in "a group of successful students"? or "right" as in "popular"? Either way, it sounds like personal opinion again and a commentary on her life from some unknown source.
:3. "she went back to her bedroom and cried out to God to make Himself real to her; and, if He did she would give her whole life to Him, no matter what He asked of her. Although Kuhn had become a believer from that moment,..." This passage is very personal and I would request that unless it can be a direct quote from her biographical material, it should be re-worded. Again, I attempted to make this change, but Canihaveacookie reverted back. Some things to think about - this passage is full of Christian terminology that is difficult for the average person to understand. God is "real" to me, but I would say that it has to do with a conviction about the truths about God as they are revealed in the Bible, and that it is not "make-believe". But this passage assumes an understanding that cannot be taken for granted. Again, to say "Kuhn had become a believer from that moment" implies an understanding that she had converted, but I would not take it for granted that if someone prayed such a prayer that they had changed from agnosticism to Christianity.
:4. "renouncing "worldly" pursuits" Such as?? I know of a few, but again this is Christian terminology that while wonderfully appropriate for a Christian missionary biography, isn't encyclopedic language like what would be expected for untrained readers.
Thank you.Brian0324 (talk) 15:22, 29 February 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  encyclopedic tone 

message: As you may have noticed, Brian0324, I'm in the process of adding all of the necessary attribution, to show that what I'm saying isn't coming from me. It's written in the books about whose life I'm writing about.
Also, the one main quote you excised from the "Wiki" IK article, as far as I'm concerned, should have quotations around it, beginning and end, and the words with quotations already around them should have 'these' around them.
As to your enumerated thoughts:
1.) I just plain disagree that writing about the religious climate of the day is beyond the scope of the article, if it's in even one of the Kuhn books.
2.) This may be personal opinion that I'm writing. However, if it's in the book that way, especially one of Kuhn's books, it's the author's personal opinion and therefore qualified without further explanation.
3.) This has already been given the necessary attribution and also was written this way by the author; and so, if you have a problem with it, take it up with Isobel Kuhn.
4.) If you want to nit-pick this, go waste someone else's time. Why can't you understand this? A person doesn't have to be a Christian to understand the difference between the generalized terminology of "secular" and "sacred" pursuits. This is the vernacular of our day. Beyond that, I'm not trying to rewrite the book, so why am I obligated to write down every or any worldly pursuit Isobel Kuhn 
gave up? I'm not. Neither am I trying to write another book.
Canihaveacookie  —Preceding comment was added at 00:54, 8 March 2008 (UTC)
thread_title: Response to Brian0324

message: This is just food for thought, but I have a real concern that this article may get too long once the inclusion of Kuhn's notable work among the Lisu is comparable to the current treatment of her early life. (See WP:SIZE) Incidental details are wonderful at times, but there are many here - her brother's army service, the spiritual climate of Canada in the 1920's, her lengthy courtship and even the soft drinks that were served at one event. I would recommend some editing here, but maybe once more of her story is told then the article can be re-evaluated.Brian0324 (talk) 16:26, 31 March 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: I made some hard decisions about what could be taken out of this article to improve its readability and length as per above. The passage that I removed about her immediate experience after her conversion was a bit confusing and unresolved. Her prayer is recorded already and I think that is fair enough just to sum up her struggles immediately afterward in this encyclopedic context, for the sake of brevity. It doesn't diminish the implications of her "testimony" to remove the extra words, it's pretty clear that she gave her life to Christian service based on the sum of the rest of the article. Her notability stems from her work in China with her husband, and my goal was to make some cuts to balance out the article that was so heavily weighted about her early life and early spiritual struggles. Valid as they are, there were probably spiritual struggles that she had on the mission field that could be just as valid that are not recorded. If this article is easier to read, interested individuals will always be able to look up her biography for the full story - as with any encyclopedia.Brian0324 (talk) 16:36, 28 April 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  Article size