Talk:Stegodyphus lineatus

message: Polygamy: It might be helpful to better describe how the section on genetic variation and mating directly relates to polygamy. You might be able to do this by describing how genetic variation may exist in the different environments that this spider is found and how this affects mating patterns. Emiliaromagna1 (talk)
=== Comments by Krishna Vangipuram (Krish707) ===
Overall, I believed this article contained a lot of interesting information. Originally, this section was completely one large paragraph, which made it difficult to comprehend the material. In order to better improve this article, I primarily consolidated the information in this section in four main sub-sections: Polyandrous Behavior, Fitness Benefits of Polyandrous Behavior, Fitness Consequences of Polyandrous Behavior, and Mate Search and Reproductive Success. I also added paragraph headings and moved consolidated relevant information under each paragraph heading (I moved text around). Krish707 (talk)
In terms of sentence structure, I introduced transitions in two paragraph headings, to better improve the flow of information.  For example, under the Infanticide from a Female Perspective heading, I added an introductory sentence, which introduced the topic of infanticide.  Under the Infanticide from a Male Perspective heading, I also added an introductory sentence, which introduced the main reason why infanticide increases an individual male’s fitness. Krish707 (talk)
In terms of content, I primarily added some background information regarding the geographic distribution of the spider and the type of prey it captures. In addition, based on my own research, I expanded on the topic of genetic compatibility in terms of multiple mating. I cited an experiment in which it was shown that although multiple mating increases the likelihood of genetic compatibility, it did not contribute to an increase in population size over generations (hence it is not a fitness advantage). Krish707 (talk)
It was a very good article in general and I learned a lot from it! In the future, I would mostly focus on using more headings to consolidate information and adding paragraph headings to help the reader get a sense as to what each body paragraph is about. I would also recommend to clarify certain details mentioned, such as mentioning that genetic compatibility actually does not necessarily have to increase the fitness of a population.  Krish707 (talk)
===Polyandry in Stegodyphus lineatus Peer Review Comments by Shannon Tai===
The additional titles and headings looked good. I added an additional section of “Increased Genetic Diversity” to further the discussion on the fitness benefits of polyandrous behavior. I summarized the results of the study with a proper citation. Shannon.tai (talk)  —Preceding undated comment added 06:21, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
thread_title:  Comment Section 

message: The additional titles and headings looked good. I added an additional section of “Increased Genetic Diversity” to further the discussion on the fitness benefits of polyandrous behavior. I summarized the results of the study with a proper citation. Shannon.tai (talk)  —Preceding undated comment added 06:21, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Polyandry in Stegodyphus lineatus Peer Review Comments by Shannon Tai

message: I added a section on Courtship Behavior under the Mating Behavior heading to include some more description about the mating behavior of the species that wasn't related to polygamy. A majority of this section discusses specifically polygamous behavior, so I added information about courtship behavior to include more general information before going into polyandry. I also changed the structure of several sentences that I had previously added to make them easier to understand, and I tried to address the suggestion about how the paragraph on genetic variation was vague. I added some description of what different concepts meant and restructured and added to sentences that were unclear by using information from the article that had already been cited in that section. AnonARK25 (talk) 21:58, 8 November 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Comments by AnonARK25 

message: I changed the wording of several sentences and fixed any grammatical errors I could find in the article. One suggestion I would make for what to edit in this articles is to add more general information about the species. This article is largely focused on polyandrous behavior and lacks a lot of basic background information about the species. Maybe additional information could be added about preferred prey or the different predators of the species. Another suggestion is that in the Sexual Selection section genetic compatibility is briefly mentioned, maybe a description of what that means and why it is beneficial would be helpful since it seemed a little unclear.AnonARK25 (talk) 21:14, 15 November 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Suggestions by AnonARK25 

message: I placed the description and the distribution sections into the intro since that seems to be the first thing people look for. As far as the rest of the article, I think it is extremely detained (almost too detailed) it probably wouldn't hurt to cut out some of the really in depth information. Feel free to change any edits I made and do what you wish with my suggestions. 2015evolution7 (talk) 23:02, 15 November 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Comments by [[User:2015evolution7|2015evolution7]] ([[User talk:2015evolution7|talk]]) 23:02, 15 November 2015 (UTC)

message: Hey I changed some stuff around on your section. Sluology (talk) 06:23, 26 October 2015 (UTC)
thread_title:  Polygamy in Stegodyphus lineatus information 

message: I think the section on polyandry is organized well, and does not overlap with information from the polygamy section which I compiled. It was definitely a challenge to avoid including the same information regarding mating behaviours but over all, information is well put together. Moreover, expanding the section of genetic diversity would be helpful towards the evolutionary story of these spiders. The addition of more examples of costs that are included in polyandry was helpful, but could be expanded a little more with some facts regarding sexually transmitted diseases and injury. The section is well written, hence I did not find any grammatical errors or a need to edit anything further. 
05:25, 16 November 2015 (UTC)
thread_title:  Comments by EVO1995 on Polyandry