Talk:Peter Dupas

message: Great job so far. Just a few things and I think it's ready to be a GA
This is how the article, as of September 29, 2006, compares against the  six good article criteria:
A good article has the following attributes.
1. It is well written.  In this respect:
::(a) it has compelling prose, and is readily comprehensible to non-specialist readers;  
::(b) it follows a logical structure, introducing the topic and then grouping together its coverage of related aspects; where appropriate, it contains a succinct lead section summarising the topic, and the remaining text is organised into a system of hierarchical sections (particularly for longer articles);  
:::*I found the article confusing with it jumping from different time periods. I'd try to break this up into chronological order
:::*The lead needs to summarize the whole article and should not contain information in it that is not contained elsewhere in the article
:::*Too many one sentence paragraphs and too many one paragraph sections
::(c) it follows the Wikipedia Manual of Style including the list guideline; 
:::*See MoS Direct quotations -- you should use blockquotes for quotes that are part of the flow of the article (which is the case for this article). You should only use the  and other similar ones for what's called "pull quotes" -- quotes that are used like quotes in magazines that are "pulled out" into a box to illustrate, but are not part of the flow of the article.
::(d) necessary technical terms or jargon are briefly explained in the article itself, or an active link is provided.  
2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.    
:* Found a couple of quotes that didn't have cites
::Fixed those - thanks. -- Longhair\talk 04:58, 6 October 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  GA nomination On Hold

message: *In Maher's section, it is said that her breast was put in her mouth like Patterson, but yet the Patterson section says her breasts were never recovered.
*In Maher's, what is the date of his arrest? It just says he was arrested and then later has his trial (with no dates) and so then there's no dates for context until his conviction. Establishing this date would also justify your organization of the murders in order of his arrests instead of by when he committed them.
*This sentence makes no sense: "claims he saw Dupas leaving the feeling the Fawkner Cemetery on the day of the murder"
--plange 16:30, 23 October 2006 (UTC)
thread_title: GA Nom failed

message: I added the quotefarm tag. See Wikipedia:Quotations --*momoricks* (talk) 12:58, 14 September 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  Too many quotations 

message: I added the tag because this article needs some help in order to abide by the MOS. I'm a member of the Guild of Copyeditors, but don't have the time to dive into this right now. --mo talk 00:25, 3 November 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  Copyedit tag 

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message: I would recommend that the portions of this article dealing with the legal cases be condensed a bit. For example, unless a person either wins his appeal or there is some unusual legal grounds for appeal, you don't need to spell out all the appeal grounds for every appeal he makes in such detail.  It would be more interesting to just read shorter summaries of the court proceedings. 
Also, the big honking quote that goes on for paragraphs from a judge saying how bad the guy is, is really overkill for an encyclopedia article.  It's pretty clear by the time you get to that point in the article he's a bad guy, will reoffend and should not be out.  It doesn't add anything to have that long of a quote from a court saying the obvious. TheBlinkster (talk) 15:30, 18 February 2016 (UTC)
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