Talk:Death of Garry Hoy

message: As soon as someone finds a citation for this Toronto Police report quote, it can be added back into the article, but for now, I'm storing it here.
"Toronto Police Service Detective Mike Stowell reported that:
"At this Friday night party, Mr. Hoy did it again and bounced off the glass the first time. However, he did it a second time and this time crashed right through the middle of the glass.[citation needed]"
Allanaaaaaaa (talk) 17:40, 23 January 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Unsourced quote 

message: I would so love to expand on this, but it's so hard to find information on him. --Sniper joe 23:41, 30 May 2005 (UTC)
thread_title: Untitled

message: I've noticed that while this article says Hoy was 39 years old at the time of the stunt, the snopes.com article linked to by this article says he was 38 years old. I did a google search and found that the web is very divided on this topic.
====38====
*Snopes.com
*dano.diaryland.com
*ABC News
*Toronto Star (Saturday, July 10, 1993, p. A4)  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.28.255.222 (talk) 01:11, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Birth and Age 

message: *Snopes.com
*dano.diaryland.com
*ABC News
*Toronto Star (Saturday, July 10, 1993, p. A4)  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 66.28.255.222 (talk) 01:11, 31 August 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: 38

message: *Toronto Star (Monday, July 12, 1993, p. A6)
*Wikipedia
*Darwin Awards
*Answers.com
*Tens and tens of websites that copy-pasted from each other, since they all have the same wording.
Snopes.com is supposed to be credible, so they are pretty much all the weight on the "38" side of the argument. However, "39" looks like a better choice. Still, it would be good to know for sure.--Methegreat 00:27, 27 August 2006 (UTC)
thread_title: 39

message: In the Myth Buster's episode they show the newspaper article and the name is spelled 'Gary', however this article is 'Garry'.  Which is correct?   — Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.247.114.63 (talk) 04:54, 19 February 2012 (UTC)
thread_title:  Gary or Garry ?

message: Can anyone fix this? There aren't online archives for either of these papers, and since I live in Argentina, I can't go looking for the print versions and citing them approprietly per WP:Citing sources/example style#Newspaper/magazine articles (or online periodicals). --W2bh (talk) 15:50, 18 March 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  Sources style 

message: One edit in January 2009 added the claim that the window "ironically" did not break upon hitting the ground, and another edit in January 2009 embellished this statement.  These two edits were made anonymously and without citation.  The existing references on the page make no mention of the glass surviving the impact, and this is a rather incredible claim.  Until documentation is provided, I suggest that the article omit the claim. Sue D. Nymme (talk) 22:19, 12 February 2009 (UTC)
thread_title:  Window did not break? 

message: came out a year later. Has a similar scene. Wonder if it inspired it. 98.92.216.144 (talk) 03:31, 21 February 2011 (UTC)
thread_title:  Hudsucker Proxy 

message: :The referenced article from The Globe and Mail refers to him as "popular" and says he was acting "playfully" at the time of his unfortunate accident, and also says the firm was "devastated" by his loss. That doesn't really support the notion that he was an intimidating jerk, and I also don't think it's really necessary for us to try to figure out whether they were only being charitable with that description. For purposes of this article, I don't think it is especially important to try to characterize his personality. —BarrelProof (talk) 19:32, 2 December 2015 (UTC)
replies: text: The characterization of personality is a deliberate attempt to defame this person, in order to make the context of his Darwin Award more palatable. By depicting Garry Hoy as a malicious egotist, the reader is less likely to question the moral implications of a Wikipedia article lampooning his death & linking to a posthumous stupidity award. 77.102.62.3 (talk) 15:35, 27 February 2023 (UTC)
thread_title:  Personal history, character 

message: The lede paragraph of this article reads "Garry Hoy (January 1, 1955 – July 9, 1993) was a lawyer for the law firm of Holden Day Wilson in Toronto. He died in an act of accidental autodefenestration."
I knew what autodefenestration is without having to look it up.  I doubt that very many readers of wikipedia do.  
The Wikipedia Manual of Style has a few things to say about language like this:
* Under "Contested vocabulary" it says: "Avoid words and phrases that give the impression of straining for formality... "
* MOS:JARGON says: "Some topics are intrinsically technical, but editors should try to make them understandable to as many readers as possible. Minimize jargon, or at least explain it...."  
In this case, Garry Hoy fell out of a window after thrusting himself at a large glass pane to impress new associates of his law firm. It's not a very technical concept at all.  Calling this "autodefenestration" only gives the average reader something to look up - it's not encyclopedic. 
I propose the second sentence in the lede be changed to something like:
:"Hoy accidentally died after slamming his body at a large windowpane in a tall office building, falling through the window as the glass popped out of its frame."
This is wordier, but most English-speakers can understand it. Please don't be shy about suggesting a better way to say it. loupgarous (talk) 04:50, 4 November 2017 (UTC)
replies: text: I agree, instead of using your proposed wording I just moved part of the "Death" section into the intro which I think flows nicely and makes the article shorter as well. --Ævar Arnfjörð Bjarmason 15:51, 6 November 2017 (UTC)
thread_title:  "...died in an act of accidental defenestration"? 

message: The wording "...  (known in 1993 as the Toronto Dominion Bank Tower)." clarifies the relevance of the phrase, instead of leaving the reader to puzzle out a seeming non-sequiamur; in either case, citation is needed.< br>--Jerzy•t 07:13, 27 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Apparent name change 

message: The word keeps getting edited back and forth. Storey is the correct Canadian spelling, and the event took place in Canada, so there's argument for that. But if this translation is considered to be US English, then it should be Story. Thoughts? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 75.112.179.16 (talk) 18:13, 25 July 2019 (UTC)
replies: text: Since it's a Canadian topic, I suggest using Canadian spelling, but in the interest of WP:COMMONALITY, maybe it would be better to avoid the spelling question by using "floor". —BarrelProof (talk) 00:51, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
thread_title:  Story or Storey