Talk:Battle of Wisconsin Heights

message: I have now reviewed this article under the six Good article criteria, and have commented in detail on each criterion below:
1 Well written FAIL
1.1 Prose
This is the main area that needs some attention. Specific points are given below, but in general the text could do with a copyedit for grammar and article flow.
*In places the prose is repetitive - there are too many mentions of Black Hawk's band consisting of noncombatants ie women, children and the elderly. This only really needs to be mentioned once, otherwise it comes over as NPOV.
:Well the main result of the battle was that most of the non-combatants were able to escape. So it needs to be mentioned at least twice so the non-combatants don't come out of nowhere at the end. IvoShandor 19:02, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Will remove most references to white, the problem with the Native American thing, often the sources don't specify whether the troops were Sauk or Fox, it was just a generic term to fill in but you're right I used it too much, I will intersperse, "Black Hawk's band" and "warriors" where it fits in.IvoShandor 19:05, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I gave it a copy edit last night but will remove the redundancy and look it over. On the last point source says spies not scouts. IvoShandor 18:42, 8 August 2007 (UTC)

text: I will clarify this. IvoShandor 18:42, 8 August 2007 (UTC)

text: That article has no sources and is wrong. (Wikipedia is never considered a reliable source for other articles btw).IvoShandor 18:42, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Strike that, one source, but it is still incorrect. IvoShandor 18:43, 8 August 2007 (UTC)

text: The point is they wouldn't let them surrender. I will clarify this, Neapope has an article so I am not going to go in depth here about who he was, I will mention that he was one of the leaders with Black Hawk. IvoShandor 18:45, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: GA on hold

message: Here is a list of the stuff I have tweaked just for reviewer's reference.
*Moved the section about Neapope's surrender attempt to "Aftermath." IvoShandor
*Removed almost all references to white and Native American.
:*I would note, however, that I do not think this constitutes a POV problem, the key characteristic about this war was that it was a war between white settlers and a band of Native Americans who did not want give up their land. But I digress, I removed it anyway. IvoShandor
*I have put in a request with an outside editor for a copy edit for grammar and flow, given that your comment came after I looked it over again I don't think my eyes are the best ones for the job. IvoShandor
:*I have went ahead and took a shot myself at the "Battle" section and will look at the others too, a second set of eyes can only help. IvoShandor
*Upon reflection, spies and scouts are the same thing in a military context, I have switched the word "spies" with "scouts." IvoShandor
*Found a source on the Ho-Chunk and added information about how they were sent ahead as a scouting party with a trader from Portage, Wisconsin. This in turn has allowed me to better clarify the "Neapope incident" which I moved to aftermath since it occurred during the evening, after the fighting had subsided.IvoShandor
*Removed Menominee from the infobox.IvoShandor
I plan to continually add to this list above. Shouldn't take all seven days to complete points brought up. IvoShandor 19:21, 8 August 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Essentially I think only the flow/grammar remains to be addressed. My copyeditor said she will be on it within the next 12 hours, about 6 hours ago. Unless any of the points haven't been addressed to your satisfaction, I think we are almost there. IvoShandor 03:40, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Stuff done

message: Congratulations on an excellent copyedit on the suggestions provided. I have now passed 
Battle of Wisconsin Heights as a Good Article, and listed it as such on the Good Articles page under History > War and military > Conflicts, battles and military exercises. For the record, IvoShandor and Cricketgirl contributed significantly to this GA pass (with five or more major edits in the last 50).
Well done! EyeSereneTALK 21:59, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Thanks for the review and the copy edits you, yourself did here. Excellent work by all. : )IvoShandor 22:02, 9 August 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  GA Pass 

message: As part of the WikiProject Good Articles, we're doing sweeps to go over all of the current GAs and see if they still meet the GA criteria. I'm specifically going over all of the "Conflicts, battles and military exercises" articles. I realize that the article was passed just last month, but I'm going through all of the Conflicts articles so I might as well make sure the article still has its high quality. I believe the article currently meets the criteria and should remain listed as a Good article. I made a few minor corrections, but there were no major problems with the article. If you have any questions, let me know on my talk page and I'll get back to you as soon as I can. I have edited the article history to reflect this review. Regards, --Nehrams2020 21:24, 23 September 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: GA Sweeps Review: Pass

message: An anon was adding some links to the see also. They would be appropriate but every one of them is already linked to in the article. No need to be redundant. --IvoShandor (talk) 06:33, 3 September 2008 (UTC)
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