Talk:Aquinas College, Perth/Archive 2

message: The images have had alot of their sizings changed by other users, and for other users with different screen settings it just looks plain ugly, i think the way it is now it just fine, leave comments below regarding this issue. Smbarnzy 11:42, 4 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Image Sizing 

message: I have removed the Low Quality images, they are unnecesary (spelling :( )
I will replace them with hq ones within a few days
symode09 06:48, 5 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: is irrelevant to the topic, and is by a teacher on matters not really related to the school. Smbarnzy 11:37, 6 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Images 

message: - Paul Kelly, Religion Teacher
:is irrelevant to the topic, and is by a teacher on matters not really related to the school. Smbarnzy 11:37, 6 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Removal - Quote 

message: This article needs more references for some of the small things in it - eg. the history page is all referenced from this one article. Smbarnzy 14:10, 22 January 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Definitely - since I last looked this article has really come along! When I have time later in the weekend I'll have another look. Orderinchaos78 14:18, 26 January 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  References 

message: This reference isn't correct - as there isn't one diary for each year, there is two diaries - for each semester and the semester needs to be stipulated. I have only used the semester 2 diary in my references - but this needs to be ammended. Smbarnzy 10:09, 29 January 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Aquinas Diary 2006 Reference 

message: * http://www.wrc.wa.gov.au/SRT/publications/landscape/precincts/precinct16/descript.html - Landforms around Aquinas College & Mount Henry Peninsula. Smbarnzy 09:29, 14 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Possible References 

message: The new ArticleHistory template is slowly being rolled out, with the idea of compressing the templates on the page. It includes peer review events. A show/hide template also exists for wikiproject templates. Gimmetrow 00:51, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  ArticleHistory and project templates

message: Im not sure as to if this statement i correct...
"Initially at CBC Perth only day pupils were enrolled, but due to population growth in Western Australia during the gold rush period, pressure was put on the school to accept boarding students.[11]" - because i thought that the school originally was planned as a boarding school, which is why Brother Regis Hughes went around WA to collect funds to build the school for boarders? I may be incorrect. Smbarnzy 08:44, 16 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Correct? 

message: This section was removed per the peer review. 
Aquinas College, like most Australian private schools, requires students to wear full school uniform at all times. The college currently has two set uniforms - the Summer uniform and the Winter uniform..
In the past, the school has had fund-raising "free dress" days, where boys may wear what they choose to school if they donate a gold coin to the charity (the charity is usually an Edmund Rice charity). The Aquinian Newsletter - 2006, Term 2, Week 7
Summer
The Summer uniform is worn in terms 1 and 4.
*Years 8-11 - College grey shorts and collared shirt, with crested pocket, long College grey socks and black shoes. The College jumper may be worn with this uniform if necessary. It is customary to wear this uniform throughout the First Term and in the Fourth Term.
*Year 12 - As for other years except year 12 wear a white shirt with crested pocket.
Winter
The Winter uniform is worn in terms 2 and 3.
*Years 8-11 - Long grey Melange trousers and the College blazer are to be worn with black shoes, grey or dark-coloured socks, grey shirt, tie and blazer, a white shirt may be worn for special occasions.
*Year 12 - Long grey melange trousers and the College blazer are to be worn with black shoes, tie, white shirt and grey or dark-coloured socks. The optional black jumper may be worn with the blazer but not as an alternative to it.
In 2006, the college announced that it would be introducing new sports uniforms and tracksuits due to the rising price of the materials used in the production of the current uniforms. The new sports uniforms were introduced in 2007 with a two year changeover period. The Aquinian Newsletter - 2006, Term 4, Week 3
any enquiries about this edit - dicuss it below or ask me Smbarnzy 08:42, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Removal - College Uniform 

message: The remainder eventually moving to Trinity College, when the St Georges Terrace site closed completely in 1961.Trinity College History (accessed:17-02-2007) The Perth City Council had plans to develop the CBC Perth Site to build an international hotel (the now Duxton Hotel) for the 1962 Empire Games, the site was eventually sold to the Perth City Council for £267,000.City Of South Perth Draft Mount Henry Peninsula Foreshore Management Plan (accessed:15-02-2007) Trinity College officially opened on 25th March 1962.Trinity College Archives (accessed:19-02-2007) 
Any probs msg me Smbarnzy 12:06, 23 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Removal - TC History from History section 

message: Wow! You've really improved this article since I took a look at the PSA/JSHAA articles in July last year. Edit it just a little more and I believe you can nominate it for Featured Article status. Auroranorth 11:51, 16 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  16th Feb Article Assesment 

message: I have found a website with a large array of CBC and Aquinas images, here are a few of the links..
* CBC Building - http://www.liswa.wa.gov.au/images/009798P.html
* AC Areal Pic - http://images.google.com.au/imgres?imgurl=http://www.liswa.wa.gov.au/images/passey/009798P.jpg&imgrefurl=http://www.liswa.wa.gov.au/images/009798P.html&h=288&w=383&sz=34&hl=en&start=16&tbnid=f1kplOFI8btFHM:&tbnh=92&tbnw=123&prev=/images%3Fq%3DChristian%2BBrothers%2BCollege,%2BWA%26gbv%3D2%26svnum%3D10%26hl%3Den
* Other Pics - http://henrietta.liswa.wa.gov.au/search/dAquinas+College+%28Manning%2C+W.A.%29+--+Periodicals./daquinas+college+manning+w+a+periodicals/-2,-1,0,B/browse Smbarnzy 14:41, 17 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Images 

message: I think that it should be changed from Salter Point, Perth, Western Australia, Australia to Salter Point, Western Australia. It just looks pretty bad, that it has all of those little links and cramps up the infobox, if anyone has a problem with it then msg me Smbarnzy 12:05, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Couldnt get it to work like that, so ive modified it to be Salter Point, WA, Australia - it looks a tad neater, if anyone can fix it, then please do. Smbarnzy 12:07, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Infobox - Location 

message: I remember seeing it on a webpage the number of staff and threw it into the article (before i knew how to reference properly) and cant find the page again, it is pretty important and needs to be referenced - i remember getting it off a google search. Smbarnzy 12:08, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Staff Numbers Reference 

message: The article is lacking alot of flow, and it is written largely in sentences not in paragraphs. We need an experienced editor to really go nuts here and get the paragraphs to flow! Smbarnzy 12:16, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Flow! 

message: We need some images for the History section - something from CBC definately, and maybe something new that has been constructed. Possibly a picture of the Mike Kinsella Hockey Pavillion on Kennedy Ovals aswell Smbarnzy 12:16, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Images 

message: I think that the Edmund Rice Administration Wing and the Aquinas College Perth Chapel deserve their own articles - they are largely notable within the community, for their architecture and historical significance Smbarnzy 12:16, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Daughter Articles 

message: This needs a massive re-write, alot of the sentences/paragraphs are poorly referenced, and just seem a bit silly. experienced editors required. Smbarnzy 12:16, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  History Section 

message: Im not too good with English, but i feel that the article has alot of grammar errors, which has been discussed in the Peer Review taking place, and its a major problem if we are going to get this article to GA. Smbarnzy 12:16, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Grammar Errors 

message: I hate having to point this out, but as this article was not submitted to GAC and passed, it has not attained GA status. This is a technical, not a merit, issue - while rankings up to B are project ratings, GA is a community rating and allows meaningful input from a wider selection of the community. I have checked the last 1,500 edits at WP:GAC to come to this conclusion. The rating was introduced by this edit on 27 February 2007. If you disagree, you are more than free to raise an objection at Good Article Review, or to submit it for consideration at Good Article Candidates. I suggest reading What is a good article? and making sure each point there has been addressed (it's actually more readable than the Featured Article one, so quite easy to follow.) DanielT5 18:47, 3 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I thought it was A-class, not B. Auroranorth (WikiDesk) 11:57, 7 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text:  Auroranorth is correct, before it was rated GA-Class it was A-Class, so i will revert it back to its original rating of A-Class, if there are any objections, please post them here or on my talk page. SMBarnZy 03:20, 9 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text:  I have decided to revert what i did, and leave it to someone with some real experience. SMBarnZy 03:22, 9 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Good decision ;-) I think B is about right, perhaps B+ if there was such a thing.  The GA reviewer could conceivably move it to GA - its certainly not a long way off.   Best to be patient and wait for your turn in the queue.  —Moondyne 03:33, 9 March 2007 (UTC)

text: BTW, its never had an "original rating of A-Class".  It was only when Auroranorth decided to update it here  that it changed. —Moondyne 03:45, 9 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Rating 

message: * Matthew Cowcher — Recipient of Fogarty Foundation Scholarship to UWA - not very notable scholarship (about 3 years old) - his brother (Jeremy Cowcher) won the same scholarship the year previous. SMBarnZy 11:05, 7 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Removal - Notable Alumni 

message: * Salter Point Campus - an article on the Aquinas College propery, including the Mount Henry area, City of South Perth plans for the site (along the river), ovals, structures, westpoint facility
* Edmund Rice Administration Wing - this article is heritage listed, but we also need to weave in a few extra facts and interestng pieces of information to make it "Notable"
* Headmasters - some of the notable headmasters that the college has had. Smbarnzy 12:36, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Possible New Articles 

message: I couldnt find a place for this image in the article
this is an important image in relation to the college, and i would like to put it into the History section, possibly in the "college split" section, and then have the foundation stone in "post split" im not sure at the current time. Smbarnzy 12:20, 3 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  CBC Perth Site Plaque - Removal 

message: * Peter Durack QC was dux of the college (but i dont remember what year - he is already listed on here)
* Eddie Whitnall (not sure how to spell it) is like "high-up" in the Gypsy Jokers or one of those bikie clubs in Perth i was told, he went to AC. Buti cant find a reference for it. SMBarnZy 03:17, 9 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Notable Alumni 

message: The school logo is described in the article yet, there is the cb logo. The cb logo is also with the section labelled "foundation" even though there is the foundation stone image ( above) available
talk to symode09's or Reveiw Me! 05:15, 10 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: The school logo should only be used once in the article and it is used in the infobox, and the school logo is an adapatation of the former christian brothers congregational crest and therefore we have that image in the coat of arms section. Please see your talk page Symode09. SMBarnZy 05:18, 10 March 2007 (UTC)

text: The CBC logo? that is on the page because Aquinas was originally established in 1894 and was named Christian Brothers College, Perth - read the article to find out more, that why its there. Having the same image twice (i have been told) will not let this article go to FA. When we had the canning river image twice, we got done for that in Peer Review, by hamedog i believe SMBarnZy 05:23, 10 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Logo /Crest 

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thread_title:  Automated Peer Review 

message: * Brother M F Redmond
* Brother C P Foley
* Aquinas College Junior School
* Private School Fees
* Old Aquinians Hockey Club —The preceding unsigned comment was added by Smbarnzy (talk • contribs) 14:10, 10 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Possible Artiles 

message: :GA review (see here for criteria)
#It is reasonably well written.
#:a (prose):  b (MoS): 
#It is factually accurate and verifiable.
#:a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 
#It is broad in its coverage.
#:a (major aspects):  b (focused): 
#It follows the neutral point of view policy.
#:a (fair representation):  b (all significant views): 
#It is stable.
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#It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
#:a (tagged and captioned):  b lack of images (does not in itself exclude GA):  c (non-free images have fair use rationales): 
#Overall: 
#:a Pass/Fail:  
Lovely number of references. Has quite a number of one sentence paragraphs that need to be merged together.  Overall, certainly a good article. PhoenixTwo 17:17, 10 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  GA review 

message: * Trevor Flugge - Past president of the Australian Wheat Board  made article SMBarnZy 10:18, 13 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I would like to see external sources cited for the Alumni section to give it more firepower, it also doesnt harm in extending the references. SMBarnZy 12:40, 13 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Notable Alumni 

message: I think that the Peter Spencer (football) and Craig White (football) articles should be renamed to have (footballer), not (football), wouldnt this be a more "correct" way of doing it? The Bitter End 08:59, 21 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Well it doesn't really matter as the qualifier is unseen in an article.  WP:DAB is silent on the qualifier format and my take is as long as its meaningful its OK.  But "(footballer)" would probably be the preferred one.  See some of the article lists in :Category:VFL/AFL players for ideas. That indicates "(footballer)" and "(Australian rules footballer)" are generally used.  —Moondyne 14:00, 21 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Former Students 

message: Substituted at 20:09, 2 May 2016 (UTC)
thread_title: Assessment comment