Talk:Eva Hesse

message: This section requires some stylistic improvement; it reads like a chronology or list. Can it be edited to give some shape to her biography? Which events were important? Which impacted her work? Aolivex (talk) 16:48, 24 April 2015 (UTC)
thread_title:  Life 

message: Several claims are made in this section that call out for further elaboration, for instance, that Abstract Expressionism left a mark, as did Hesse's relationship with Sol LeWitt. These are both fascinating things to note, but the discussion as it is feels incomplete. Furthermore, the second to last paragraph is not cited. Aolivex (talk) 16:48, 24 April 2015 (UTC)
thread_title:  Career 

message: This strikes me as the wrong heading for this section. Recommend collecting all the information about the reception of her work into its own section, or integrating it with more developed sections about her work. Aolivex (talk) 16:48, 24 April 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Movements

message: The first paragraph is often cited; this is a red flag, especially since it leads with, "Her art is often viewed..." By whom? Aolivex (talk) 16:48, 24 April 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Legacy

message: This section suffers from the same problem as the "Life" section, above. It reads like a long list, without giving any sense of the historical significance of its contents. Recommend either reorganizing into a list/table, or re-writing so the relative importance of key events shines through. Aolivex (talk) 16:48, 24 April 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Exhibitions

message: This section, and the following two (Visual & Critical Analysis and Preservation) should be reworked so they are easier to follow. For example, why, in a section on critical reception (Visual & Critical Analysis) do we learn, "Hesse’s work implements a strict color palette. All of her work, and especially her drawings are based on repetition and simple progressions"? This lacks logic, and while it's interesting, could be better used elsewhere. Aolivex (talk) 16:48, 24 April 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Organization of material

message: This article should be copy edited for technical errors and awkward phrases, and especially for economy. Under "Visual & Critical Analysis" we get "historians and viewers". Are we referring to art historians here? If so, aren't they also "viewers"? If the author is referring to the general public as viewers, then we should question why we need to learn about the general public at all. Additionally, titles of works should be italicized and the formatting of the notes, as well as the relationship between the citations and the references list, are problematic. Aolivex (talk) 16:48, 24 April 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Grammar, spelling and diction

message: The picture is mad shitty, is this someone's photoshop filter over a picture they didn't take? Wow.  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 74.110.219.67 (talk) 04:12, 28 May 2012 (UTC)
replies: text: Yes. I've marked it for deletion at Commons, though I don't suppose it will be deleted. I've replaced it here by a Fair Use of a well known photo that first appeared in NEWSgrist. Such a tragic loss so early, Eva. I'll upload an example of her work as well in the near future. Coat of Many Colours (talk) 15:21, 16 February 2014 (UTC)
thread_title:  Picture 

message: Is this contradictory or is there a distinction between show and exhibition?
"Her first solo show of sculpture was presented at the Kunstverein für die Rheinlande und Westfalen, Düsseldorf, in 1965.[8] In November 1968, Hesse exhibited her large-scale sculptures at the Fischbach Gallery in New York. This exhibition was titled Chain Polymers and was Hesse's only solo sculpture exhibition during her lifetime."
Janm67 (talk) 08:08, 3 September 2016 (UTC)
replies: text: Good catch - I added in the USA...Modernist (talk) 11:35, 3 September 2016 (UTC)
thread_title: One or two solo shows?

message: === Lede ===
This article needs a clearer lead.  See: Wikipedia:Lead section.  – Autodidact 02:15, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
replies: text: Ah, much better now!  – Autodidact 01:56, 8 September 2006 (UTC)

text: According to this it didn't change names until 1960, so the correction is correct.  I don't know which name Lippard's book actually uses, but it's the same school in any case. —Celithemis 08:34, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
replies: text: Lippard's book cites HS of Industrial Arts, the correction and the citation are both correct now.Modernist 13:40, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
thread_title: Resolved issues

message: This article needs a clearer lead.  See: Wikipedia:Lead section.  – Autodidact 02:15, 16 August 2006 (UTC)
replies: text: Ah, much better now!  – Autodidact 01:56, 8 September 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  Lede 

message: This previously said "After graduating from New York's High School of Art and Design in 1952," which was cited to "Lippard 1992, p.218" It now says "After graduating from New York's School of Industrial Art in 1952" (no citation). I myself have no idea, and I do not have the Lippard book. Can someone please sort this out? - Jmabel | Talk 04:54, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
replies: text: According to this it didn't change names until 1960, so the correction is correct.  I don't know which name Lippard's book actually uses, but it's the same school in any case. —Celithemis 08:34, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
replies: text: Lippard's book cites HS of Industrial Arts, the correction and the citation are both correct now.Modernist 13:40, 6 November 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  High schoool 

message: This should really be much longer, she is a very important artist!  — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hyperion311 (talk • contribs) 22:27, 21 April 2012 (UTC)
thread_title: Article length

message: I could find no evidence of COI, so I removed the template. --Mitzi.humphrey 13:52, 12 August 2017 (UTC)
thread_title: Template removal

message: Sources I am considering using for a future edit:  
Sandler, Irving (1996). Art of The Postmodern Era (1st ed.). New York: HarperCollins Publishers Inc. .
Stoops, Susan (1996). Feminism and Abstraction in the '70s. Waltham, MA: Rose Art Museum and Brandels University.
Butler, Cornelia H. (1999). Afterimage: Drawing Through Process. Los Angeles: The Museum of Contemporary Art Los Angeles. .
Fer, Briony (2007). "Eva Hesse and Color". The MIT Press 119 (October (Winter)): 21–36. Retrieved 02/19/15. Check date values in: |accessdate= (help)
(Altb478 (talk) 18:55, 19 February 2015 (UTC)
replies: text: Whoops - looks like there's a bit of code that didn't get swallowed. Otherwise these look good! Remember you're eventually going to need 10 sources. What do you like about these sources so far? Aolivex (talk) 16:03, 23 February 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: Project Edit

message: This article is shaping up nicely; the content has been expanding to offer more extensive knowledge in this Biography.
As well the sources used/provided are valuable, offering objective, coherent, and multifaceted information for advancing the discourse.
However there are many areas of improvement:
Images tend to impart far more for understanding aspects of the Artist's life and endeavors; perhaps more can be contributed.
Structuring makes it easier to find specific information, as well as write out an extensive encyclopedic entry; perhaps more heading and sub-heading titles will do much to help expand the scope of the paper.
More specific areas of improvement could be:
Biography, it is minor and could be expanded to encompass her life, to better represent her life.
Her career could be a subheading and have more subheadings within.
Her exhibitions could be a larger section with more subheadings alluding to specific works and significance therein.
(JonathonTWeber41 (talk) 16:06, 24 March 2015 (UTC)
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message: I have read that Hesse's cancer was caused by her use of carcinogenic materials or might have been.  This is important to cover in the article, but more authoritatively than in this note. Larry Koenigsberg (talk) 01:37, 10 December 2020 (UTC)
thread_title:  Hesse used carcinogenic materials