Talk:David Lewis (Canadian politician)/Archive 1

message: The article may be improved by following the WikiProject Biography 11 easy steps to producing at least a B article. More references and information regarding the forming  the NDP, his years at Oxford and as a CCF organizer. -- Abebenjoe 09:21, 2 March 2007 (UTC)
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message: ===1968–1971 the Douglas/Lewis transition===
Further updates are needed on the period between 1968 and 1971. This was the period of rising tensions between Tommy Douglas and David Lewis.  Since Lewis was the leader in the house for over seven months between June 1968 and February  1969, he was also effectively in charge of the party.  Stephen Lewis, repeating a similar deed performed on Ontario Leader Donald C. MacDonald, asked Douglas to step down.
Added to the intrigue between Douglas and the two Lewis's, was the creation of the Waffle in 1969.  How the party handled them would cause plenty of disagreement within the establishment, including T.C. Douglas and David Lewis' differing approaches.  This is detailed in Walter Stewart's books and in the McCleod's book on Douglas.  
===1971-1974 Leader===
More detail is needed about the '72 election and its aftermath. Also, ther relationship between David and his wife Sophie got very complex during this period. A little more information about Stephen's leadership during the Waffle's expulision and its effect on the federal wing should also be explored. The McCleods, Smith, and Stewart cover this period.
===1975–1981 Retirement and death===
David Lewis went back to his boyhood shtetl Svisloch in 1978, only to find that the Nazi's killed everyone he knew and destroyed the town during the Holocaust.  Smith details this section of his life. Once these sections are filled in, i think the article is ready to be nominated as a GA category article.  Abebenjoe 09:05, 15 April 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Items that still need more work

message: David Lewis went back to his boyhood shtetl Svisloch in 1978, only to find that the Nazi's killed everyone he knew and destroyed the town during the Holocaust.  Smith details this section of his life. Once these sections are filled in, i think the article is ready to be nominated as a GA category article.  Abebenjoe 09:05, 15 April 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: 1975–1981 Retirement and death

message: This article has a lot of good, detailed information but it has too many problems to make Good Article at this time:
* The intro needs to be expanded to two or three paragraphs.  It should summarize the entire article, at least covering more of what's contained in the article than it currently does.
* The grammar has some major problems.  Example:  "...meant there were factory workers that could be mobilized into Labour organizations. Which is why the Jewish Labour Bund, or Bund for short, ..."  Please ask another editor or editors who edit similar article subjects to copyedit/scrub the article for you.
* Avoid one-sentence paragraphs.
* I think the article is divided into too many subsections.  For example, the "Life in Canada" section doesn't need to be subdivided.  If a section only contains one paragraph, it can probably be combined with adjacent sections.
* Combine many of the citations.  You can do this by either combining them all into a single inline citation at the end of each paragraph, or using the "ref name =" format.  If you need to see an example here's an article that uses them:  .  This will greatly reduce the length of your footnotes section.
* Separate the footnotes and references into different sections.  See the same article that I linked to above for an example.
* The "See also" section doesn't have any links in it, so it can be deleted.
* The same information is repeated in the infobox at the top as in the infobox at the bottom of the article.  Unless the bottom infobox contains new information, it doesn't need to be there.
* Some of the reference titles are italicized and some are bolded and italicized.  The boldings need to come out.
Although I'm not approving this article as a Good Article, it doesn't mean I don't think good work hasn't been done on it.  Like I said, the article is filled with excellent information and is well on its way.  If the issues I found can be addressed, then I think the article should be resubmitted for GA review and should have a good chance for approval the next time.  If you have any questions, please list them here or ask on my talk page. CLA 08:54, 31 May 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I've used the strike-thru feature to indicate which items have been addressed.  The time-consuming edits are still under revision.--Abebenjoe 18:08, 2 June 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Ok, even though I failed the article and removed it from the GA candidate listing, let me know when you've completed the corrections and I'll relook it without making the article go to the end of the line. CLA 00:36, 5 June 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Good Article (GA) review

message: The only campaign that he fought that needs the detail of the votes is his defeat in the 1943 by-election, because it really affected him.  The other elections in 1940, '45, and '49 were more or less an exercise of putting a name on a ballot: he did not put his heart and soul into those campaigns, like he did the Montreal campaign.  Also, and this a big also, for practical reasons, the article is getting way too long with all the tables (with them in it, it is at the 60K mark, which is considered too long).  So, I am keeping the election result tables here, and maybe there might be a better way to integrate them, either into this article or in another article, because it certainly looks like Winshevsky put a lot of effort to create the tables.--Abebenjoe 07:14, 5 July 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Voting results for Lewis in the 40s 

message: Seems that David Lewis was followed by the RCMP for five decades - this is the write up - if anyone has a tape of it to milk:
http://www.cbc.ca/whodoyouthinkyouare/stories/ext_avi2.php
The wording in the article is very awkward - it seems as if the person who wrote it sees a bunch of different types of Marxism.  David Lewis was very anti-communist because his father was threatened by the Soviets for Union organizing. I would like to see comparisons/contrasts between the Bund movement and the social gospel - whether they are basically the same thing or not.  I would like to see more on the role human rights played the the philosophy of both the organizations David Lewis associated himself with and his own actions.  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.77.37.48 (talk) 09:42, 1 March 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  RCMP Keeping an Eye on Lewis 

message: I removed most of the election results and placed them here, since they are increasing the size of the article, and more prose is needed to fill in some other areas.

|-
  
|Liberal
|Marvin Gelber
|align="right"| 21,042 ||align="right"| 43.76
 
|New Democratic Party
|David Lewis
|align="right"| 17,396 ||align="right"| 36.18
  
|Progressive Conservative
|William G. Beech
|align="right"|9,648||align="right"|20.06 


|-
 
|New Democratic Party
|David Lewis
|align="right"|21,693||align="right"| 46.94
  
|Liberal
|Marvin Gelber
|align="right"| 18,098  ||align="right"| 39.16
  
|Progressive Conservative
|Maxwell Rotstein
|align="right"| 6,427   ||align="right"| 13.91


|-
 
|New Democratic Party
|David Lewis
|align="right"|14,225||align="right"|46.87   
  
|Liberal
|Lucio   Appolloni
|align="right"|9,551||align="right"|31.47   
  
|Progressive Conservative
|John Oostrom
|align="right"| 6,401||align="right"|21.09    
  
|Unknown 
|Keith Corkhill
|align="right"|172||align="right"|0.05     
 --Abebenjoe (talk) 01:03, 28 November 2009 (UTC)
thread_title: York South election results

message: It's a minor point but it seemed strange to me that the section on Rhodes Scholarship and Oxford makes no reference at all to the Rhodes Scholarship. Maybe mention it in passing around Lincoln College and/or change the title to de-emphasise it. FunkyCanute (talk) 18:34, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
replies: text: Thanks for the comment FunkyCanute.  I believe most of the information about him being selected for the Rhodes Scholarship is located at the end of the McGill section, since it seems to flow with that section.  The title reflects why he was at Oxford, but I take your point, I'll add something in the first sentence or two that his Scholarship allowed him to be at Lincoln College or something to that effect.Abebenjoe (talk) 00:14, 24 March 2010 (UTC)

text: I elected to move the Rhode Scholarship paragraph, that dealt with his selection, to the main section dealing with Oxford while he was on the scholarship.Abebenjoe (talk) 06:55, 24 March 2010 (UTC)
replies: text: It works well there FunkyCanute (talk) 10:04, 24 March 2010 (UTC)
replies: text: Thank you for pointing it out.Abebenjoe (talk) 15:11, 26 March 2010 (UTC)
thread_title: Peer Review March 2010

message: Substituted at 14:38, 1 May 2016 (UTC)
thread_title: Assessment comment