Talk:Davenport, Iowa

message: *Is there nothing in the native Americans, even as little as when it's thought they first colonised the area?
*Did the steamboat captain deliberately crash his boat into the bridge?
*Something on the impact of the railway needs to be mentioned. Completed in 1856, it coincides with a 6-fold increase in population between 1850 and 1860 (and 11-fold by 1870), so unless there was another factor in this increase it was clearly important. How did this affect the economy, did it fuel industry?
*"Davenport experienced a post-war boom after World War II": slightly repetitious, would "Davenport experienced a boom after World War II" suffice?
*"Oscar Mayer, Ralston Purina, and other companies all built plants in west Davenport": is "all" necessary?
*"Davenport is believed to be protected from tornadoes by a blessing from a "mass mound", similar to an altar": "is believed" is a bit vague (believed by whom?), perhaps it would be better to say "According to local legend, Davenport is protected…"
*The first paragraph of the neighborhoods section is repetitious and in a short, three-line paragraph the word "neighborhoods" is used four times.
*"The city can be divided into five areas for neighborhoods": that's an odd phrase, is it meant that there are five neighborhoods? Also, unless Downtown is a proper noun, it doesn't need to be capitalised after the colon.
*The third paragraph of the geography section, where it talks about German settlers, should be merged with the first paragraph as it too mentions German settlers.
*Camp McClellan should probably be wikilinked, and is there any particular reason that the history section doesn't mention that Davenport was used to parade soldiers in the Civil War?
**Currently it links to a different Fort McClellan CTJF83 chat 20:26, 5 December 2009 (UTC)
replies: text: *So fix it. As far as the crime rate, note the following WP:FAs with crime sections Washington,_D.C.#Crime, Boston#Crime, Cleveland#Crime, Detroit#Crime.  CTJF83 chat 21:59, 31 March 2010 (UTC)
thread_title: Comments

message: The African Americans in Davenport, Iowa article is currently up for AfD. In reviewing the Davenport, Iowa article, it appears that it lacks a discussion of race relations and of Bix Biederbecke and the local jazz scene.  Would it be possible to incorporate material from that article into this one to present a comprehensive article covering both "black" and "white" Davenport? Thanks, Racepacket (talk) 14:01, 31 December 2010 (UTC)
replies: text: I'll have to see what I can add. CTJF83 chat 18:37, 31 December 2010 (UTC)
thread_title: African Americans in Davenport, Iowa

message: Need citations for (not a comprehensive list):
*The skyline began forming in the 1920s with the building of the Kahl Building, the Parker Building, and the Capitol Theatre during an economic and building expansion
*In recent years, many renovations and building additions have occurred to revitalize the downtown area, including repairing Modern Woodmen Park, the building of the Skybridge and the Figge Art Museum.
*Davenport is located approximately 170 miles (270 km) west of Chicago and 170 miles (270 km) east of the Iowa state capital of Des Moines. The city is located about 200 miles (320 km) north of St. Louis, Missouri, and 265 miles (426 km) southeast of Minneapolis, Minnesota. Farmland surrounds Davenport, outside the Quad Cities area.
*During the last half of the nineteenth century, government assumed expanding responsibilities for public welfare and public works improvements.
*At the federal level, Davenport is in Iowa's 1st congressional district and as of 2011, is represented by Democrat Bruce Braley. The two Senators are Republican Chuck Grassley and Democrat Tom Harkin. At the state level, Davenport is represented by the forty-first, forty-second, and forty-third Iowa Senate districts and in the Iowa House of Representatives by the eighty-first, eighty-fourth, eighty-fifth, and eighty-sixth districts.
*Both are represented by Democrats with Jim Lykam representing the eighty-fifth and Cindy Winckler representing the eighty-sixth.
*The per capita income for the city was $18,828. About 10.5% of families and 14.1% of the population were below the poverty line, including 19.2% of those under age 18 and 6.4% of those ages 65 or over.
*2009 was the 39th consecutive festival
*For air travel, Davenport Municipal Airport – located adjacent to the city's northern city limits – serves smaller aircraft, and is the home of the annual Quad City Airshow. The Quad City International Airport across the river in Moline, Illinois, is the closest commercial airport.
Other comments (again, not a complete list):
*What kind of source is Fetzer? Needs publisher, depending on type likely needs page number
*Quad-City or Quad City Times? Italicized or not?
*Ref 37 fmt
*Need pages for multi-page PDFs and all books
*Need dates for news articles. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:23, 15 March 2011 (UTC)
thread_title:  Some commentary on sourcing 

message: Here is the start of my review, as if this were at FAC. I weighed in on the last FAC and am somewhat surprised to see that the points raised there seem not have already been addressed. I would look carefully at all three FACs and see what actionable requests have not yet been addressed and do my best to address them (or get someone's help to do so). I would also look at WP:WIAFA
*A professional level of English is an FAC criterion, but looking at just my comments in the third FAC, the prose in the lead is still not great. There are four sentences in the first two paragraphs of the lead that begin "Davenport is" (3 in the first paragraph and a "Davenport was" sentence is there too). 
*Suggestions I made in the last FAC to start to fix some of these very issues have not been acted on - I am not saying they all have to be changed exatly as I suggest, but there appears to have been relatively little change made to any of the points raised.
**The first and second sentences of the lead could be combined (getting rid of one "Davenport is" construction)
**The third sentence could be switched to active voice avoiding "Davenport was..." (and in general if passive can be avoided, it is a good idea to do so)
**The last two sentences of the first paragraph could be combined somehow, so the phrase Quad Cities need not be used twice in two sentences
*I would link Iowa in the lead, but there is still a lot of WP:OVERLINKing - Illinois and Mississippi River are still linked twice in just the lead! This is an easy fix.
*I still worry about issues of comprehensiveness (an FAC criterion too) - there is nothing on the Native Americans who lived in the area that became Davenport before the US bought it and before the city was founded. Given what I know of the Black Hawk War, it seems like there had to have been natives in the area.
*The many listings in the city on the NRHP are still not mentioned that I can see, even if only a See also link
*I looked at all three FACs and there have been repeated requests to include more on the history of minorities in the city - there is a See also link to African Americans in Davenport, Iowa, which has its own problems, but does list quite a few references that seem like they could be used to add something here.
*There are several places which need references but do not have them - the first paragraph in Landmarks for example. 
That's a start. Once the other issues are fixed, I would get a copy edit. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ruhrfisch (talk • contribs)  04:36, 30 March 2011 (UTC)
replies: text: Ok, thank you! CTJF83 11:41, 30 March 2011 (UTC)
thread_title:  Review 

message: The article states that in Davenport "[t]here are two main universities: Saint Ambrose University and Palmer College of Chiropractic[...]."
Going from its name, I would suspect that Palmer Chiropractic College is not a university, but in fact... a chiropractic college. Could this statement in the article be verified or revised?
- 2warped@gmail.com 68.36.147.128 (talk) 02:39, 29 September 2017 (UTC)
thread_title:  Palmer Chiro College, a university? 

message: Hi! Could someone format the pictures so that they do not create several lines of extra whitespace. Thanks! BroncoHawk (talk) 08:49, 19 July 2021 (UTC)
thread_title:  Picture formatting 

message: This 2008 GA has lots of uncited material, especially in the History and Infrastructure sections, while much of the article is woefully out of date, with information from 2008-12 being used as "current" (see e.g. the Government section). If these issues aren't fixed, a GAR may be necessary. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 18:01, 24 May 2024 (UTC)
thread_title:  Issues with article