Talk:Preity Zinta/Archive 5

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Shahid • Talk2me 17:42, 27 August 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I'd also like to add that theres no need to name every single ref tag that is used in the article. Only refs that are used more than once need a name, not all of them. Regards,xC | ☎  06:30, 12 May 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  A new automatic Peer Review 

message: This article is in excellent shape. It's well written, well sourced, and quite an interesting read. I made a few minor grammatical and manual of style changes, but overall, the article meets the Good Article criteria, and will be listed. As an additional note, it might be a good idea to move 'personal life' up before 'career', since that is generally information that began before her film career took off. I'd also recommend 'career' to 'film career', since it deals with that aspect of her career, and to avoid any confusion with the 'commitments' section. It might also be a good idea to rename 'commitments' to something more descriptive, like 'present work', or something similar, to be a bit more descriptive (the term "commitments" could have a pretty wide range of meaning).
Overall, though, the article is excellent. Good work! Dr. Cash 05:50, 12 October 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: GA Review

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Shahid • Talk2me 21:43, 22 October 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Updated Automated peer review 

message: Just skimming through and saw this sentence: By the time she was 17 she began partying and dating. Though I think its a good idea to show some continuation from her education etc, I don't think the sentence is appropriate because she probably did many things during that time. But on the plus side, if anyone can define the "partying" aspect of her life such as go to clubs etc then maybe that would be a good idea.
After reading some of her interviews, her best friend Shagun seems to be an important part of her life but she's not an important person or in the acting field. For example, Leonardo DiCaprio's best mate is Toby Maguire and in his opening paragraph this is mentioned but Shagun is someone who is literally unknown so should it be included? -- Pa7 22:30, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Hi! Leonardo DiCaprio is not a good source right now. You can change the word "partying". If you see FA articles like Jolie you will see that there everything is mentioned, all of the all. We can change it but the idea is important. Her best friend mmm I just think she is so important to Zinta, and she is mentioned ALWAYS in some of the most reputed sources, so we can mention that. Blof removed the quoted part of it and wrote that like this and it is more encyclopedic. Because I think saying "who is mentioned often during interviews" is more encyclpedic than "she is her best friend". Shahid • Talk2me 21:38, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
replies: text:  OK, I guess that's fine then. I was just skimming and saw the sentence so thought I'd get opinions on it. Yes I agree with your last sentence:  Because I think saying.... I guess "partying" is the best way to put it or "socializing" I guess? Any suggestions? -- Pa7 22:50, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: No problem, so Shagun is OK. As for partying, agree. We can put socializing, or your previous suggestion "visiting clubs" though it's not directly in the source, so I'm not sure. Do you have any additional suggestions? Shahid • Talk2me 22:58, 13 October 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Just to note, friends who are actors or members of the industry were mentioned here back in time (Hrithik, Ash, Shahrukh, Abhisheketc), if you remember, but xC and other editors decided that it's unencyclopedic, and today I quite understand. A good example is Rani-Ash who were friends ("Ashuma I love you and we will always be friends") and look what they're today... Cause in fact if they had a tiff how can we guaranty that they still are. On the other hand Shagun, is a friend of a whole lifetime. Shahid • Talk2me 23:07, 13 October 2007 (UTC)

text: So OK, Blof removed the partying stuff. No problem. I would like to add about Zinta's role in Dil Se, that it was quite racy by Indian standarts (i.e "Are you a virgin?" etc.). I'm thinking of a good idea of how to write it there. Shahid • Talk2me 21:53, 15 October 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Best friend and social life 

message: All, the article has been listed for good article reassessment. Thanks - KNM  Talk 03:49, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: [[WP:GAR|Good article reassessment]]

message: The sentence Following this, she went on to portray a variety of unique characters, credited with bringing a change in the image of Hindi film heroine is definitely tweaking of references to bring in personal point of view. The reference says Is it her degree in Psychology that prompts Preity explore diverse characters or is it just her zest for life that makes her the zaniest before camera?. It just claims that Preity explores diverse characters and that too, indirectly. Tweaking the whole sentence to say Portray a variety if unique characters is bit too much. Gnanapiti 17:47, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: OK. Will rewrite to the relevant text. Shahid • Talk2me 17:52, 6 November 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: POV in lead