Talk:Cohn process

message: This article on the Cohn Process for plasma fractionation was created by user Vivek216 as part of a WP:SUP student project on Downstream_processing at Cornell University.  
This article is slated for scientific peer review by the user's classmates and instructor over the next two weeks and will be finalized (for the purposes of the class) by 15 Dec 2006.  
If you would like to help, please hold off from the normal "bold editing" process until after December 15, and instead leave comments and suggestions for the author here on the talk page.   Your thoughtful review will be very much appreciated!
Many thanks, 
Jean Hunter, instructor, BEE 464   
susato 16:37, 29 November 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  About this article 

message: ...can be eliminated simply by backspacing enough to attach the text to the next paragraph above, then adding two carriage returns to establish a new paragraph.  susato 16:37, 1 December 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:   Those weird boxes with the dashed lines... 

message: Hey Vivek.  Besides the references and general formatting, there are a few things I noticed in the article.  First, did you mean to make the variations to the process a new section?  Theres a whole lot of good information in the article but I have a suggestion.  I think it might really help if you could make some kind of table or chart to take all the information of the process and give the details of each step.  I think that might help give a better idea of the process and help in terms of being able to compare each step to another step in terms of temperatures, which protein is being precipitated, etc., so give that some thought.  Early on there is a statement that human blood can be used as a therapy to  shock patients.  It seems that it should say human albumin.  Overal though,l the article is packed with good content and flows well, but I think summing up all the steps in a table or diagram could add a lot.  I also would be interested to see a picture of the vessel where the process occurs if you could find one. Steve Lund 08:10, 5 December 2006 (UTC)
thread_title: Reviews

message: Hello - Good job!  My first two comments would be - reference your sources and site some other websites about the Cohen process.  A few sites I found (very quickly, and you should look over before using) are : http://www.albumintherapy.com/us/en/index.html or http://www.scielo.br/scielo.php?script=sci_arttext&pid=S0100-879X1998001100003&lng=es&nrm=iso.htm&tlng=en
Also, maybe if you could create a chart or image or something to outline the different parts of the Cohn process, it might make the Cohn Process easier to understand.  I can't remember exactly what you had in your presentation, but i remember a few images that made the whole thing come together for me.  You probably can't use those images, but i'm sure you could create a chart of the different process with cells that say what they do, and what they have been used for, etc.
Overall, great job!
ReginaSophia 20:26, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  Review 

message: Hey Vivek, good article but I think you should add more internal links since there are a lot of words you had to use that people might not know the meaning of.  Good use of pictures, they were helpful.  Also, I noticed there were a lot of numbers and percentages in your article. I'm sure those are important but maybe you could add a bit more qualitative content to balance out all the quantitative info that you have.  I also agree with regina's comment about maybe outlining the Cohn process somehow so that the main points and steps are easier to decipher. Overall, lots of good detail, good job
Snickerr291 21:03, 7 December 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  Avani's review 

message: Hey Vivek, content-wise I thought your article was very good. I think you used an appropriate amount of detail to describe the Cohn process and the tables really helped. The way you structured the article also makes it pretty easy to understand. However, I would consider using subsections for each variation of the Cohn process (3.1, 3.2, etc.). Also it may be helpful to expand the very beginning of section 1, details of the process. Here you could add a brief description of fractionation, and maybe add onto the sentence “fractions 1, 2, and 3 are precipitated out” by quickly saying what’s fractioned out (“Unwanted plasma proteins” or maybe slightly more detail). It would also be useful to add links to albumin, blood plasma, pH, Fractionation, pI, etc., and to cite references.
As a whole, I enjoyed reading your article. Excellent job.
Wwc26 01:28, 8 December 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  Will's review 

message: I read your article and then I read the reviews of everyone else and I really...well...don't have much else to say that hasn't already been said.  I think that the picures and figures are really great, but I think for wikipedia purposes qualitative information would be a little more helpful to the everyday reader.
Cheers 
132.236.221.23 02:30, 8 December 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  Evan's review