Talk:Tropical Storm Hermine (1998)

message: Some of the wording is sloppy and needs fixing. The layout of the article (at least the MH, which is what I focused on) isn't so good, and if this were a GA review I would probably fail it. However, I know the author has some computer issues, so I won't consider it a GA review, so to give him some time.
*This is repetitive - "the northwest into the northwest". The whole statement is "and subsequently turned towards the northwest into the northwest Caribbean Sea", but I think it could be reworded.
*In the SH, you never make the progression from the tropical wave to the tropical system that was the precursor to Hermine. What's more confusing is you don't say where the depression formed, not even that it was in the Gulf of Mexico. Some smoothing is needed. Also, the first time you use UTC, you don't link it - you should.
*"Initially, the cloud pattern associated with the system was uncommon, featuring a tight and well-defined circulation, as well as clusters of deep convection to the south of the center." - what's so uncommon about that?
*In the next sentence, you say the environment was unfavorable, but you don't say how.
*"Due to the presence of the same upper-level low, the depression was moving towards the south." - first, I was annoyed to see consecutive sentences start with the same word, but more importantly, the track map suggests it was moving west-southwestward.
*Why did it turn to the north after completing the cyclonic loop?
*"As a result of the wind shear" - you never mentioned wind shear before. Where did the shear come from, and was it always present?
*"Slight weakening too place, prompting predictions that it would be downgraded to a tropical depression within 12 hours. A continually weakening storm, it moved ashore near Cocodrie, Louisiana at 0500 UTC on September 20, and subsequently deteriorated into a tropical depression." First, is the "too" part of a missing phrase, or a typo? Second, is it important that it was predicted to be downgraded to TD status within 12 hours? There's no context from when the 12 hours occurred. I am assuming it remained a TS at landfall, but it could be clearer how strong it was at landfall.
*There is a major comprehensiveness issue at the end of the storm history. When does the circulation fully dissipate, and what happens with the low? All you say is that it weakened into a TD, then a few sentences about what the depression did immediately after landfall.
♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:51, 13 December 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: with those. –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 04:09, 14 December 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: There was discussion with TC circles that Hermine contributed to Karl's development.  If a reference can be found to substantiate this (which could include a reference from the Daily Weather Map series if it can be seen from there,) it should be added to the article.  Thegreatdr (talk) 13:38, 16 December 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: Good point, I added that to the article. –Juliancolton Happy Holidays 14:13, 16 December 2008 (UTC)

text: Whoops, my mistake. Fixed. –Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 21:25, 27 December 2008 (UTC)
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