Talk:Jeffrey Katzenberg

message: Hi editors, my next request for the political activities section is a bit trickier, but I hope it makes sense. 
This request is to replace the third paragraph of the section with new text that I think better captures the information available in reliable sources and presents everything in a more neutral manner. As before, I've used TextDiff to highlight the differences, followed by a rendering. 
The differences are a bit more substantial, but hopefully editors find it to be more balanced and neutral. My proposed changes:
*Clean up WP:EDITORIAL language (e.g. "When the details of Oriental DreamWorks emerged") 
*Remove the sentence about Andy Spahn, which has been made redundant after past edit requests 
*Retains Rubin's comments while rephrasing them in a way that I think better meets NPOV
*Removes the Nicholas Confessore sentence as it is unsourced and I have been unable to locate the original interview. I also think the presentation of the Confessore sentence lacks encyclopedic tone and doesn't really add anything to paragraph 
*Changes the first sentence to be about an SEC investigation related to Oriental DreamWorks, which I believe is more salient to the topic 
*Removes the sentence attributed to the Sunlight Foundation
**The blog post does not ascribe any impropriety to Katzenberg, and does not directly support connections between the founding of Oriental DreamWorks, the Obama administration, and Katzenberg's donations
**The presentation of the information in Katzenberg's Wikipedia article is clearly placed and worded in such a way to imply impropriety
**The wording in the Wikipedia article also lacks encyclopedic tone and contains WP:OR – writing that Allison "suggested" something, rather than what Allison actually wrote, seems to me a clear violation of that policy
**The only mention of fast-tracking is in the headline, which is not an RS per WP:HEADLINES
Let me know what you think! I am happy to answer any questions you may have. Additionally, if editors are curious, I have created a draft that shows where I ultimately hope the article ends up. The remaining changes are much less complex than this. Cheers BINK Robin (talk) 16:55, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
replies: text: @BINK Robin: "Foreign official" should probably be plural per NYT, and the third sentence seems a bit run-on, please fix as necessary. (maybe split into two sentences?) Thanks, ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me!  23:55, 13 May 2024 (UTC)
replies: text:  simple enough! Let me know what you think of this. BINK Robin (talk) 15:38, 14 May 2024 (UTC)

text: ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me!  21:02, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
replies: text:  Thanks so much for the help! BINK Robin (talk) 15:52, 21 May 2024 (UTC)
thread_title: Political activities request 4

message: Hi editors, I thought I'd put in a series of requests to wrap things up here, with the hope that the community might engage with the individual requests at their leisure. 
*Change alma mater field to Ethical Culture Fieldston School as it was before
*Add Good Morning, Vietnam to list of notable works
*Change title to 
I think in each case, these changes make the infobox more accurate and complete 
:@BINK Robin: What role did Katzenberg have in producing this film? iirc, the notable works parameter is for works by the subject, not for works done under a company he lead or something. ARandomName123 (talk)Ping me!  16:15, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
replies: text: Fair question, this article from the Guardian says he produced Good Morning Vietnam. I’ll defer to you if you think this is worth including in the Infobox. Cheers, BINK Robin (talk) 17:11, 22 May 2024 (UTC)
thread_title: Final wrap-up requests