Talk:Howard Atwood Kelly

message: Introductory paragraph: 
The introduction is extremely short and lacking. It leaves the reader unsatisfied in terms of who was Dr. Kelly and what exactly were his great accomplishments. I would include more information on his career and his character. 
Career: 
This section is incomplete in terms of the different stages in his career life. It is unbalanced, as it has much more information on his time at Hopkins than anywhere else. I would recommend including more information on his time at McGill University, how did he get there and why did he leave? I would also revise the paragraph structure, as some sentences don't follow each other in a complete thought. 
Finally, I think his Personal Life should come before his Career, as it makes more sense to understand who he was a person first and then as a doctor. 
(Amunizr1 (talk) 06:25, 4 March 2015 (UTC)
thread_title: student Review on the entry for Howard Atwood Kelly

message: Source: "After a Paris honeymoon they settled in Baltimore and raised nine children in the same religious tradition that Kelly was raised. Only his youngest son, Edmund Kelly, followed his footsteps into medicine."
Student edit: "After their honeymoon in Paris, the married couple decided to live in Baltimore, where they raised nine children together, and as a devout follower of the Episcopal faith, Kelly brought up his children in accordance with the same faith that he had. Additionally, out of nine children, only one, Edmund Kelly, studied medicine, despite their father's devoted career in the medical field."
I am not to take more time and crawl through to find more.  Most places where there is colorful language there is very likely too-close paraphrasing or straightup copyvio.  We see this all the time. Jytdog (talk) 01:25, 30 April 2017 (UTC)
thread_title: Close paraphrasing

message: Please work on specific sections instead of massive reverts. The citations are individually put in. Weird formatting is a result of separate members of a group working on the same wiki page. The underlined portion is intended for the other group member to see where citations are needed. The close-paraphrasing are fixed by including more sources and rewriting the parts you have pointed out, please stop massive reverts. Opinions regarding references coming only from JHU(JHMI) websites are fixed by references to the NIH journals. Note also that the quotes came from Howard Kelly's book and his work is already in the public domain. 
Lpeng18 (talk) 14:18, 2 May 2017 (UTC)
replies: text: Did you actually look at what the two of you did?  Please look at this.  What is up with all the underlining, incorrect citations, and unsourced content?  This is not OK in a live WIkipedia article - please do not use live Wikipedia as draft space.  Please perfect the content in your sandbox and have it checked by someone before you bring it into WP. Thanks.  Jytdog (talk) 14:22, 2 May 2017 (UTC)
replies: text: Yes, I did, the plan was for us to change consecutively within an hour. Your revert actually prevented her from adding the citations(her action was denied due to your revert), but advice taken, will be doing it in my sandbox, then move to the main page. Lpeng18 (talk) 15:09, 2 May 2017 (UTC)
replies: text: Thanks! And please do have it reviewed by someone (perhaps your class liaison) before moving to mainspace.  Would save possible friction which I actually have no desire for. Jytdog (talk) 15:32, 2 May 2017 (UTC)

text: User:Lpeng18 I agree that citations are tedious if you do them manually.  I don't know if you are using VisualEditor or the wikitext editor, but there is an automated way to citations in either of them. See here: User:Jytdog/How#Formatting_citations. The wikitext editor actually has more options than the VisualEditor does.  But it takes like 10 seconds. Jytdog (talk) 01:57, 3 May 2017 (UTC)

text: User:JytdogThe final version is profread, reviewed by the Professor, edited again, and put on the page. Please help us to improve this article, and we will really appreciate your help. Lpeng18 (talk) 17:57, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
replies: text: Thanks for your note.  Super busy w RW stuff but will review probably tonight.  At least it ~looks~ OK with no weird formatting and normal citations. :) Jytdog (talk) 18:16, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
thread_title: new edits