Talk:Utah State Route 68

message: Finetooth's excellent copyediting brought the second lead to say "Subsequent projects extended it..." However, the extensions didn't create new road as "projects" would make it sound, the extensions just went on pre-existing road. I wanted to change projects to "extensions," but "Subsequent extensions extended..." sounds redundant. I'm not a very good writer so I wanted to see if Finetooth or anyone else willing to opine has to say on the manner - CL — 02:03, 9 August 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: "Projects" isn't really correct, since the 68/249 swap only involved changing signs. How about "it was subsequently extended"? --NE2 02:32, 9 August 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: Yep, I had trouble with "extensions extended" too but got stuck. How about "Subsequent changes extended it..."? Finetooth (talk) 03:19, 9 August 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: "It was subsequently extended" would work also, but it's passive voice. The active voice usually has more "oomph". It's up to you, though. "Changes" might be a weasel word. Finetooth (talk) 03:27, 9 August 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: "The state subsequently extended it"? (You can't get more specific than "the state" because changes are made by the DOT and legislature cooperating.) --NE2 03:35, 9 August 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: Okay, I went ahead and changed it. CL — 06:13, 9 August 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  "Projects" 

message: I just realized that the route description is too short for a 70-mile route. I'd expand it but I don't want to render Finetooth's copyediting obsolete by replacing it with my own version; if Finetooth were willing to copyedit that one section again, I'll expand the RD. CL — 19:18, 10 August 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  RD 

message: The course description seems better than before. I have a couple of questions.
* I got out my Rand McNally Road Atlas and rested it on my lap as I worked through the article. It appears to me that SR-68 crosses the Jordan River east of the airport. It seems to cross the Jordan Canal at least four times, and it crosses the Brighton Canal and the Surplus Canal, and others that my map doesn't clearly identify. I don't know if any of these crossings are important, but you might double-check the location of the Jordan River crossing.
**I'll check it out.
***I think the article is mistaking the Surplus Canal for the Jordan River crossing. () The Jordan River proper continues more or less straight north before crossing SR-68 up in Rose Park. I'll update the article accordingly. DeFaultRyan (talk) 16:17, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
thread_title: Copyeditor's thoughts

message: Adding the golf course names is good, but linking directly to outside web sites from within the main text is frowned upon. If you think those links are important, they could go into an external links section below the end of the main text. See External links in the Manual of Style for details. Alternatively, it would be fine just to leave them black and unlinked. Finetooth (talk) 19:47, 12 August 2008 (UTC)
replies: text: I wouldn't even include them in the external links... they don't pertain to the highway at all besides being located on the road. I hope no one minds me removing the external links from the well-intentioned edits - CL — 05:55, 13 August 2008 (UTC)
thread_title: External links

message: Can this page be moved to Redwood Road? Another Wiki User the 2nd (talk) 23:18, 4 March 2021 (UTC)
replies: text: The problem is the route is only known as Redwood Road in Salt Lake county, outside of Salt Lake county it is known by other names. Dave (talk) 03:12, 5 March 2021 (UTC)
thread_title:  Move to Redwood Road?