Talk:Crown of Immortality/Talk Archive 1

message: Please try to write in clearer English - I truly cannot understand some of the meanings of the text. For example the leading sentence contains not a single verb: The "Crown of Immortality" symbolized by the ring of stars, the ultimate salvation in Christian lore - but yet possibly transparent to religions in the modern interpretation as well as in its origin. 
If I try to rephrase it I get the The "Crown of Immortality", which is depicted by a ring of stars, symbolizes the ultimate salvation in Christian lore. The second part of the sentence may have all kinds of meanings This symbol (the Crown) is related to symbols in other religons; both in its modern form as well as in its origin or This symbol (the Crown) was originally copied from other religons; now in its modern form it has influence on other religions. Actually this both does not make sense. What did you mean, I truly cannot decipher that part of the sentence - and there are more lines like that. Arnoutf 08:38, 22 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: The problem is that what you put in should be understandable, otherwise I cannot do anything with it. Can you please explain the section: "but yet possibly transparent to religions in the modern interpretation as well as in its origin." as I have no idea what that means. Arnoutf 10:20, 22 February 2007 (UTC)

message: Hi guys; as I said before I know little of the crown. My problem is that I am not learning much from this article either (which I think should be its aim). My main problem is that the article seems to assume people know what the crown is. I would suggest to change the structure of article in the following way to provide better reading:
* Intro section
* What is the crown - Explain what it is, how it is depicted, which cults use it etcetera.
** Symbolic meanings of the crown - I think this would be best served as a subheader under what is the crown
* History of the Crown - The current version can be used as template. However, important is to add (sourced) statements as to
*# When and where was the crown first referred to under its current name
*# How did it spread through early (and later) Christion societies.
* Where to find the crown Interesting section; but should be secondary to what it is and its history; perhaps add subsections like: in literature; in architecture; in painting but that may develop later on
* Similarities I would make 2 subsections
*# Symbols with similar meaning but different image
*# Symbols with similar appearance but different meaning (that would be the EU flag).
* See also / Links
* References and Notes Arnoutf 11:35, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Structure

message: Although I agree with some of the reasons given in the deletion motivation; there seems to be something called Crown of Immortality in the Christian arts. This article was created only 3 days ago by an unexperienced editor. If the creator acts quickly and start filling in the references and shapes up the article; I would object against the deletion.
However I agree that unfounded symbolism speculations on the EU talk page should stop. Arnoutf 12:05, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Proposed deletion

message: OK; I get your point about the, In my eyes obvious, simulairity with the EU Flag. I haven't said anything about a conspiracy, that's your words. If you concider "Protected by Christian Values" conspirational, then well - I can't help you. I delete the EU Flag part and will continue to improve the article. - Roberth Edberg 14:00, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I'll leave it to you "experienced guys" to get rid of the deletion tag. - Roberth Edberg 14:17, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text:  Note that I did not place the deletion tag; I am indeed not a fan of Christian mysticism but try not to cloud my judgement by that; if an article is well sourced, not speculative (indeed my objection about the EU flag) and otherwise of interest it should be allowed in Wiki. I removed the tag as this is clearly not an uncontested remvoal of the aricle. Improvements are needed however, otherwise the article might find itself in the WP:AFD procedure one of these days (mind you, not a threat; I won't nominate it, more of an incentive to get it right soon) Arnoutf 15:52, 24 February 2007 (UTC)

text: Please do not add interviews, that is original research. Perhaps yoou may consider asking them where you can find a book about the crown and use that as source. PS: You should be able to check a 'remember me' box when logging on. Arnoutf 16:42, 24 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  ??? 

message: Now we are talking about improving. Just a tip. Dont overdo the wikilinks. In your most recent introduction you wikilinked ring, star, religious, art, and described (among others). However, the relevance of these wikilinks does not go beyond simple dictionary relevance. I took a fair number out and combined religious and art to a link to religious art (that is a relevant wikilink). As guiding principle, link only to relevant articles for the current article, don't wikilink every word. Arnoutf 20:11, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Wikilinking

message: I'm concerned about the amount of Original Research I'm seeing. Of all the examples listed, only two are specifically called Crown of Immortality. There also seems to be an attempt to draw similarities to modern day flags that is totally unsupported by citations. CovenantD 20:30, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: True, the article is new and I will add more further on. If you scratch just on the surface, you will find that the ring of stars is out there. No-one doubt that. Thing is that it's seems to be very limited information about the ring (Crown). I guess we will find more as we dig deeper, in fact the stamp painting (fresk) is located in Drottningholm Castle (Were the Swedish King lives) and it's not the same one as the fresk in the Knights House. So there is actually three places at the moment. - Roberth Edberg 23:07, 25 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text:  Just to make sure that you know what is meant with original research (or OR) please read WP:OR. Good luck  Arnoutf 08:35, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

text: Yep, in this case published proof of the name of the Crown. For example a published painting/fresk description by the artist mentioning the crown by name. --Roberth Edberg 11:28, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

text: And there appeared a great wonder in heaven; a woman clothed with the sun, and the moon under her feet, and upon her head a crown of twelve stars...
This does not alter the fact that the article is OR. Simply providing a source for the use of the name, is not a source for all that is said about it here.Paul111 12:21, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

text: True, The Bible does not name the crown, it just say a crown of Twelve stars. But artists have put a name on it for us and that's the Crown which this article is about. About the other stuff in the article, I'm working on it. Please be patient. --Roberth Edberg 12:36, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

text: If a artist, writer, poet calls a star circle Crown of Immortality in his work, isn't that enough? Then you already got your answer in the Source part and if google on it, you will find more. AND According to the initial description of the article there IS NO claim that all rings of stars by definition is the Biblic 12 star halo of virgin Mary, which I guess that you're questioning in your argument. --Roberth Edberg 11:43, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: If the creator of the work has called it such, then yes, I would accept that (with proper documentation). I would even allow a respected art critic or religious scholar who calls it such (again, with proper documentation). CovenantD 12:02, 27 February 2007 (UTC)

text: I added the Edward Grim part again as it include the ...crown of Immortality... Paul111, this article is about the "Crown of Immortality" - a term named, described and used. If you know exatcly what the Crown is is, why not define it yourself, as you ax everything out. Or help us develop the article instead! --Roberth Edberg 12:05, 27 February 2007 (UTC)

text: OK, I changed the top description - which of course was the key as the description now is transparent and may list ANY art that include a star circle or crown, without any speculations. Good, thing. Thanks. --Roberth Edberg 12:52, 27 February 2007 (UTC)

text: I will merge "Where to find the Crown" with "Name Sources" and separate paintings, fresks and text sources. --Roberth Edberg 13:09, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Original Research 

message: The correct term appears to be Crown of Twelve Stars. See Woman of the Apocalypse and the Bible, Revelation 12:1
:And there appeared a great wonder in heaven; a woman clothed with the sun, and the moon under her feet, and upon her head a crown of twelve stars...
This does not alter the fact that the article is OR. Simply providing a source for the use of the name, is not a source for all that is said about it here.Paul111 12:21, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: True, The Bible does not name the crown, it just say a crown of Twelve stars. But artists have put a name on it for us and that's the Crown which this article is about. About the other stuff in the article, I'm working on it. Please be patient. --Roberth Edberg 12:36, 26 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Crown of Twelve Stars

message: There needs to be some documentation that these are called "Crowns of Immortality." Simply pointing out a halo or circle of stars and calling it a Crown of Immortality is not enough to satisfy Verifiability - you have to prove that a reliable source has called it that. CovenantD 09:39, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: If a artist, writer, poet calls a star circle Crown of Immortality in his work, isn't that enough? Then you already got your answer in the Source part and if google on it, you will find more. AND According to the initial description of the article there IS NO claim that all rings of stars by definition is the Biblic 12 star halo of virgin Mary, which I guess that you're questioning in your argument. --Roberth Edberg 11:43, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: If the creator of the work has called it such, then yes, I would accept that (with proper documentation). I would even allow a respected art critic or religious scholar who calls it such (again, with proper documentation). CovenantD 12:02, 27 February 2007 (UTC)

text: I added the Edward Grim part again as it include the ...crown of Immortality... Paul111, this article is about the "Crown of Immortality" - a term named, described and used. If you know exatcly what the Crown is is, why not define it yourself, as you ax everything out. Or help us develop the article instead! --Roberth Edberg 12:05, 27 February 2007 (UTC)

text: OK, I changed the top description - which of course was the key as the description now is transparent and may list ANY art that include a star circle or crown, without any speculations. Good, thing. Thanks. --Roberth Edberg 12:52, 27 February 2007 (UTC)

text: I will merge "Where to find the Crown" with "Name Sources" and separate paintings, fresks and text sources. --Roberth Edberg 13:09, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Where to find the crown

message: I moved the gallery to a new article called Circle of stars - a more general term, in accordance with Wikipedia naming guidelines. Anything useful from this article can probably be moved there.Paul111 18:18, 27 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Perhaps create a section within that article about references as the Crown of Immortality, and turn this into a redirect? Either way, do you think that this article is documented enough now that the AfD could be withdrawn? I think all of the initial objections have been overcome, and the details of naming conventions aren't really the purpose of AfD. CovenantD 19:30, 27 February 2007 (UTC)

text: You might have been more patient and wait untill after the AfD; that would have solved the issue. Arnoutf 12:20, 28 February 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: You personally can't halt the process, but you can request that it be withdrawn at the AfD page. I think that makes it a Wikipedia:Speedy keep]]. An admin will take a look at the comments, the article and the improvements and act accordingly. With all the work that's gone into it, it might be kept per WP:SNOW :)  CovenantD 05:41, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  New article 

message: The underlying message in this article seems to be something like this:
* on some artworks a circle of stars is an allegorical representation of the Crown of Immortality
*therefore, all circles of stars on any work of art, flag or seal are the Crown of Immortality
*if any literary work mentions the "crown of immortality", then it is talking about a circle of stars
*in some cases the circle of stars is a Christian symbol
*therefore all circles of stars are Christian symbols of immortality
This is not what an encyclopedia is for - linkage of similar concepts to imply a logical connection.Paul111 11:06, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I object, you're talking about the Circle of stars article. This article does NOT relate all circles of stars in art to Immortality, only those who are. From a researcher point of view I think it's good to also have an article (Circle of stars) that collect circle of stars in art, no matter what meaning they have. --Roberth Edberg 11:38, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
replies: text:  Paul111, that may have been an interpretation of the first version of the article. As it is now, I only see a list of references to situations in which the crown is mentioned. Arnoutf 13:12, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  Logic of this article 

message: The intro text as of now says that the Crown of Immortality is a circle of stars, yet it included references to texts which do not mention a circle of stars. Is the Crown of Immortality a circle of stars, or not? If it is not, then other literary uses (as metaphor) should not be included.Paul111 16:39, 1 March 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: What is this article about?