Talk:Monoplegia

message: Hi all •whomever that may be• I’m pretty new to the back end of Wiki, but thought to share some of what I know-I am a consumer, after all.
I’m writing because there is a Category missing from the entries on Monoplegia: paralysis-monoplegia due to accident or surgical interference or impact injury or trauma or... A specific example (and one I suffered from after a fall following a seizure five+ years ago) is compartment syndrome, which required an emergency fasciiotomy to relieve. It’s a complicated, ugly story with many complications, but the main point I wanted to convey is--well, I did so. I don´t know if this is the right place to do so, but hopefully the person in charge will move it to the right place if I was mistaken.
Cheers, JoeRose50JoeRose50 11:10, 19 June 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: {[sofixit}}  WhatamIdoing (talk) 04:18, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
thread_title: Hi

message: Hello, overall I thought this article was very informative and well written, I'd just suggest linking some terms (like Brown Sequard Syndrome and some of the brain regions) to their own wiki pages.
Wheatona22 (talk) 16:59, 13 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Secondary Article Review 

message: Hello, I thought that the lead paragraph was confusing to read, be specific when using “it” in the first paragraph 4th sentence. For the paragraph under Signs and Symptoms include citations. I really liked the incorporation of links throughout the webpage.  MMstudentMU (talk) 14:43, 15 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title: Secondary Article Review

message: The main, important aspects of this topic were covered efficiently. This article is well written with good presentation of the information. A few more term links could be added, as well as at least one reference for the the lead and "Signs and Symptoms"  subtopic. Wagnerb95 (talk) 19:03, 15 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title: Secondary Review

message: Hey guys! Great work. I thought your information was all very thorough and well organized. The article flowed nicely and in a way that made a lot of sense. I learned a lot and like how things were explained simplistically. There were a few grammar errors but other than that great job.George baldas (talk) 03:27, 16 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Secondary Review 

message: Great article! I do have a few suggestions and comments, however: 
1. This is a well-written article, clearly written and concise. You may want to go through and expand on some sentences, for instance, in the “Signs and symptoms” and “Diagnosis” sections. Also, as a side note, “Signs and Symptoms” should have sentence capitalization —> “Signs and symptoms”
2. Your information all seemed to be good secondary sources, but I would include more information in the “Diagnosis” section if you can, I think that section might need more information/explanation. 
3. I think overall this article covered enough aspects of the topic, I would, however, have liked to see more information about cerebral palsy and its relation to monoplegia.
4. This article had good third person grammar and neutral voice was very clear and did not include original opinion.
5. I do think you could use more images. An image of the different areas of the brain in the “Mechanism” section might be helpful.
Overall, well done, this was a very good article.
Maribio97 (talk) 06:20, 16 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Primary Review 

message: Good Work, this article was very well written and straight to the point. I give you credit for accurately and fully describing each treatment method without supporting one or the other through a personal bias. Your first source was heavily relied on in this article and although it is a good up to date secondary source, possibly finding another source could prove beneficial.
JaminB (talk) 01:48, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Secondary Review 

message: Hi classmates! Overall, I feel that your article was very well written and organized. I felt that you touched on all of the topics that would be associated with monoplegia while keeping it structured. I looked at a few of your sources and they appear to be very reliable secondary sources. Specifically, the source I thoroughly read through was "Diagnosis of Nonorganic Monoplegia With Single-Pulse Transcranial Magnetic Stimulation." While I like that you used a case study to gather information for your article, I think you should find additional sources and could get into more detail and expand on a few of the topics, such as "Signs and Symptoms" and "Diagnosis." There was no source listed under your "Signs and Symptoms" topic and including one or finding another source for this would further strengthen your article. The article was neutral and was not opinionated, however, again it could be more informative. I also suggest that you add images to your article. Maybe under the "Mechanisms" topic you could add an image of the areas of the brain monoplegia affects. I like the links that you have included. It seems like you put a lot of thought and research into it, well done!  — Preceding unsigned comment added by Britaanna (talk • contribs) 01:54, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Primary Review 

message: Hi guys! In general, I thought your article was fairly informative on the overall topic of monoplegia. It was well written and concise enough to understand the general idea of the topic. I just have a few suggestions:
1. Under the "Signs and Symptoms" topic, the last part of the second sentence seems a little repetitive, I suggest deleting the very first sentence ("There are a number of symptoms associated with monoplegia.") in this section to allow the rest of the sentences to flow nicely together. 
2. I looked over all of your sources and they all seem great and reliable so great job with finding those! I specifically read through the article, "Constraint-induced movement therapy for upper extremities in people with stroke" and found that at the bottom of this article, there was a link to the updated version of the study. The updated version concluded that months after going through this type of treatment, there was no evidence of persisting benefit. Perhaps you could use some of the data and conclusions from this article, and use it as another source in your page.
3. In the "Mechanism" section, it would be helpful to provide some images of these areas of the brain as a visual aid, along with more hyperlinks to each section of the brain that you listed for more information on those areas if possible!
4. If you could find more reliable sources to use and expand a little bit more in the "Diagnosis" topic, that would help to further explain how monoplegia is typically diagnosed.
Overall, great flow and organization throughout the entire article! Just a few minor additions and changes may be beneficial.
Nc801 (talk) 11:20, 16 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Primary Review 

message: Hello! 
I looked through this source and it is in fact a medical review, although I did find a figure or two that included original research by the writers. It seems that you only really used the abstract and opening paragraph, but considering that you used the information accurately based on what was written in the review, I think your information in the “Mechanism” section is appropriate. I think you could cite this article more often in the section, however, because I found several sentences that contained information from this article that was not cited.
Maribio97 (talk) 04:59, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Review of "Assessment of Upper Extremity Impairment, Function, and Activity Following Stroke: Foundations for Clinical Decision Making"