Talk:Jonathon Band

message: This article was a little stub. Have added about 16 references and expanded the article lots. LordHarris 23:18, 8 March 2007 (UTC)
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message: Good job addressing these issues so quickly, but I just have a few more things that should be addressed.
*The intro should still have the two sentences combined and there should be an apostrophe within "world's".
:::I have combined the two sentances and added an apostrophe. Hope that reads ok?
*Were you able to find any information on birth location, the abroad locations, parents?
:::Unfortunately no. I have tried several internet searches with lots of different terms and had a good search on the RN website but nothing. Because he is the current first sea lord there is no publication, e.g. biography books etc mentioning him. The only suggestion that I could think of to get this sort of information would be to email the Royal Navy or MOD public information departments - though its unlikely that they would know or if they did, would care to pass on such information. Perhaps in the future new information will become available or someone with a personal relationship will be able to expand.
*"In the mid 1970s, he undertook an exchange program with the United States Navy and served onboard the USS Belknap. The Belknap, a guided missile cruiser, which is now no longer in service." These sentences could be combined into something like "In the mid 1970s, he undertook an exchange program with the United States Navy and served onboard the guided missile cruiser, USS Belknap, which is now no longer in service." If you don't want to combine, then leave it as is but remove "which".
:::Combined as suggested.
*"In 2003 he spoke out for the crew of the HMS Turbulent and their efforts at being the longest ever deployed submarine." This still sounds a little off, I think it needs more detail near the end, maybe "...Turbulent for their efforts on serving for the longest deployment on the submarine."
:::I have reworded, hopefully this is now more clear?
*I agree that you don't need to reformat the inline citations into templates, but the space still should be remove between punctuation and the inline citations. There are a few cases that I can still see.
:::I have removed several gaps/spaces between the punctuation/full stops and the citations - hopefully this is now ok.
*"Upon taking up the post of First Sea Lord he became the professional head of the Royal Navy. and Chief of Naval Staff." This needs to be fixed still, remove the period and then include "and later Chief...".
:::I have reworded into the following:
In February 2006 Band took over the position's of First Sea Lord and Chief of Naval Stafffrom Admiral Sir Alan West and in a press statement set out his out the Navy's priorities in the 21st century. Upon taking up the post of First Sea Lord he became the professional head of the Royal Navy. - is this better?
Again, you're almost there, just fix these last few things and I'll pass it. --Nehrams2020 22:39, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: I believe I have fixed those few things and explained about the lack of detail on parents etc. LordHarris 23:13, 30 April 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Just a few more things

message: I have passed this article as a GA according to the GA criteria. Good work on completing all of these in one day. It is unfortunate that some of these candidates take so long to be reviewed. There were a few more spacing issues with the inline citations, but I took care of them. Sorry for being so picky, just want this article to be the best it can be for good article status. Continue to improve the article as you get new sources and help keep the article to its high standards. Keep up the good work, and I hope you continue to improve the quality of articles on Wikipedia! --Nehrams2020 01:33, 1 May 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: GA passed

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message: Jonathon Band has been reviewed as part of Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/Project quality task force. As mentioned in Nehrams2020's review above, the references could be formatted using the templates on WP:CITET, but at present this is a (strong) preference rather than a strict criterion (mainly from the perspective of including retrieval dates for web pages). However, I believe the article currently meets the criteria and should remain listed as a Good article. The article history has been updated to reflect this review.  Regards, EyeSereneTALK 10:49, 10 October 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: GA Sweeps (Pass)

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