Talk:Harry Yount

message: This article was automatically  assessed because at least one article was rated and this bot brought all the other ratings up to at least that level. BetacommandBot 16:39, 27 August 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  WikiProject class rating 

message: asked me to take a look at this article in preparation for a GA nomination, so here are my observations:
Lead
*The lead to be expanded so as to better summarise the article. Probably needs to be about three times its current length, covering the main point(s) from each of the major sections.
Date and place of birth
*"He was the tenth child born to his father". Children are usually born to a mother. Do we not know who Harry's mother was?
Civil War military service
*The caption under the painting of the Battle of Pea Ridge says that Yount was captured during that battle, but the text to the right says he was captured in a skirmish before the battle.
Hunter and trapper
*"Yount also had some success as a prospector." What did he prospect for? Gold?
Gamekeeper in Yellowstone National Park
*We're told twice, in two separate quotations, that Yount recommended that no one man could patrol the park, which seems like unnecessary redundancy. I'd suggest dropping the "... and concluded that protection of the park 'cannot be done by any one man immediately before the first quotation.
First National Park Ranger
*"Stephen Mather, the first director of the National Park Service, wrote the forward to this book". Presumably this should be "foreword", not "forward"?
Homesteader and prospector
*"After he resigned from his job in Yellowstone, Yount lived for a while in a community called Uva in Laramie County, Wyoming." That seems unnecessarily prolix; why not just "lived for a while in Uva in Laramie County, Wyoming"?
*"He homesteaded in the area in 1887". Is there a convenient wikilink for "homesteading"? Those of us fortunate enough to live in God's own land may well have very little idea what homesteading means. Did he, for instance build a home in the area in 1887, having until then lived a tent?
*You really need to provide at least one citation for this section.
Malleus Fatuorum 15:41, 13 August 2012 (UTC)
replies: text: Malleus/Eric, thank you very much for your comments. It has taken me some time to do the work. I believe that I have made all the improvements that you suggested, and more, and accordingly have nominated this article for Good article. I also want to thank User:Rosiestep for a face to face review at an Edit-a-thon in San Francisco yesterday. Your input is also appreciated. Cullen328 Let's discuss it 06:23, 27 May 2013 (UTC)
thread_title:  Pre-GA review 

message: In response to the request on my talk page, I'd like to offer the following comments on this article:
*Some sentences are a bit lengthy
*"Harry Yount's father, David Yount, was about 44 years old at the time of Harry's birth, and Harry was the couple's tenth child" - not covered by a reference
**Added Supernaugh as a reference for this. He discusses it in a footnote. Cullen328 Let's discuss it 03:12, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
replies: text: Thanks, . I will get to work on those items. Cullen328 Let's discuss it 01:24, 21 August 2018 (UTC)
replies: text: No worries. Given that Yount fought in the Civil War and later supplied the US Army, this would be within the scope of the Military History Wikiproject's A-class review process if you'd like a further pre-FAC assessment. Nick-D (talk) 02:03, 21 August 2018 (UTC)
thread_title:  Informal review 

message: My thanks again to  for the detailed critique and  for words of encouragement. Thanks also to the editor who assisted so graciously and thoughtfully during the GA review, years ago, and who has offered other positive comments much more recently. I apologize for putting this project on the back burner for a while, but it would be nice to improve it to FA standards now. I have made some minor preliminary improvements. I have responded to most if not all of the comments in Nick-D's preliminary review. I will work more on that tomorrow. I would be very grateful for any constructive criticism, especially the easily actionable items, but I will certainly take major issues to heart. Cullen328 Let's discuss it 04:38, 4 September 2019 (UTC)
thread_title:  Seeking input 

message: - I'm not convinced that the link to John W. Phelps is correct.  John W. Phelps didn't have anything to do with the Missouri regiment or Pea Ridge, while John S. Phelps seems to be who should be referred to here. Hog Farm  Talk 18:45, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
replies: text: Hello, . You are right and I have made the correction. Thank you. Cullen328 (talk) 18:54, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
replies: text:  Cullen, I also suspect that  may be better phrased as  - Shea & Hess's Pea Ridge: Civil War Campaign in the West refers to Phelps as a colonel at the time of Pea Ridge. Hog Farm  Talk 23:29, 17 January 2022 (UTC)
thread_title:  Wrong John Phelps