Talk:Seymour H. Knox I

message: Hi. Hopefully theses comments might help you to improve your article:
* That picture of Knox with the Woolworths could be placed somewhere else
* Perhaps the "Family" and "Upbringing" could be merged as "Early life" an be placed before the "Five and Dime Stores" section; the paragraph about his wife could be placed in this last section, with some re-wording.
* September 20, 1884, as a full date, can be wikilinked
* The Post Woolworth Career section is quite small, so it could be included as a subsection of "Five and Dime Stores"
I am certain that sooner or later a more experienced user will give you some more suggestions. Dalobuca 17:16, 15 April 2007 (UTC)
thread_title:  A few comments 

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Many of my comments agree with those made by Dalobuca above.
*1b - Group some of the shorter sections together; reorder sections into chronological order - eg. Upbringing before Five and Dime Stores. Integrate trivia section into text; if you cannot integrate it, remove it as non-notable.
*2a - Please reference section on his wife and interests.
*3b - Remove or integrate trivia section as above.
Also,
*Wikify dates
*Move image at the top elsewhere, perhaps to family/upbringing section
*Some minor changes to grammar, spelling: clarify first 'trivia' statement (f you have not removed it; perhaps change use of 'friendly rivals' - doesn't read well
--ck lostsword|queta!|Suggestions? 09:17, 16 April 2007 (UTC)
replies: text: Much better. Definitely a Good Article! ck lostsword|queta!|Suggestions? 16:32, 17 April 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: [[WP:GAC|GA]] Review

message: In order to uphold the quality of Wikipedia:Good articles, all articles listed as Good articles are being reviewed against the GA criteria as part of the GA project quality task force. While all the hard work that has gone into this article is appreciated, unfortunately, as of 
November 26, 
2007, this article fails to satisfy the criteria, as detailed below. For that reason, the article has been delisted from WP:GA. However, if improvements are made bringing the article up to standards, the article may be nominated at WP:GAN. If you feel this decision has been made in error, you may seek remediation at WP:GAR. Ruslik (talk) 10:56, 26 November 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: GA Sweeps (delisted)

message: This article's Good Article promotion has been put on hold. During review, some issues were discovered that can be resolved without a major re-write.  This is how the article, as of November 27, 2007, compares against the  six good article criteria:
:1. Well written?: See notes below.
:2. Factually accurate?: Yes, but see notes below
:3. Broad in coverage?: Good enough
:4. Neutral point of view?: No problems
:5. Article stability? Yes
:6. Images?: OK
Please address these matters soon and then leave a note here showing how they have been resolved.  After 48 hours the article should be reviewed again.  If these issues are not addressed within 7 days, the article may be failed without further notice.  Thank you for your work so far.— Ruslik (talk) 10:13, 27 November 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Good article nomination on hold