Talk:Cotton wool spots

message: — Assignment last updated by A Lee Express (talk) 16:24, 4 August 2022 (UTC)
thread_title: Wiki Education assignment: Foundations II

message: * update references 
* improve overall structure: add a section for causes and possible treatments 
* Expand upon possible causes rather than just listing disease states
* update image, properly cite it and confirm copyright 
* cite more references toward the beginning of the article 
* hyperlink the medical jargon or explain what it is briefly
SMiry (talk) 21:40, 25 July 2022 (UTC)
thread_title: Foundations II 2022 Group 4 Proposed Edits

message: By @A Lee Express, @M. Navarro Zapiain, @Giovanni Lara, @Rsue23 A Lee Express (talk) 16:25, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
replies: text: Thanks for the suggestion, we agree that the pathophysiology section is better placed up before causes to give some additional insight. The section has now been moved! Slosea (talk) 20:28, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

text: Thank you for verifying our citations and emphasizing the credibility of our article! We will continue citing secondary sources as we continue to add more information. SMiry (talk) 20:47, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

text: Overall, the article represents a well-balanced stand point because the editors mention that cotton wool spots can be affected by underlying disease states (i.e. diabetes, hypertension), as well as, drug interactions like cladribine mentioned on the multiple sclerosis case. I believe this article would be stronger if there were cases that highlighted how cotton wool spots have affected underrepresented groups. Other than that, great job. M. Navarro Zapiain (talk) 17:02, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
replies: text: Thank you for the feedback Martha! We will try to look for some cases that reflect underrepresented groups.  Hsahota (talk) 20:46, 1 August 2022 (UTC)

text: Thank you for your feedback. In the literature, few causes were explored beyond broad disease states such as diabetes, hypertension, and autoimmune disorders and were given any more than a cursory attribution to these disease states, so many of the case reports of speculative causes of cotton wool spots are still in their fledging states with small sample sizes. That being said, I do agree that it may not seem like the best idea to include these studies, they are indicative of a potential future direction that research is going for cotton wool spots, especially with the lack of existing literature for the condition. This being said, taking into account your feedback, it would be wise to at least curtail these sections in order not to give the impression that they are of higher importance than they really are or at the very least, section them off into a “future direction” section. Mhassan1738 (talk) 21:04, 1 August 2022 (UTC)
thread_title:  Foundations II 2022 Group 3 Peer Review 

message: Group 4 has reviewed the references and they are now correctly formatted. 
SMiry reviewed references #1-6. There were no predatory publishers. Reference #2, #3, #4, and #6 were incorrectly formatted by using the published month and year in the reference. Month was taken out. SMiry (talk) 16:49, 4 August 2022 (UTC)
thread_title:  Foundations II 2022 Group #4 Reference Edits