Talk:Music of Mesopotamia

message: This article needs more dates and time periods. It covers like 3,000 years. GuineaPigC77 (talk) 16:48, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
thread_title:  Dates and time periods 

message: Currently we have a phrase under the Music education section which reads "whether music was included is largely uncertain" - yet the earlier part of the paragraph offered details of it already. I'm going through Lucas 1979 (which is already cited) and finding extensive material on it, including quotes from dialog about music instruction, etc. Not sure what to do here. GuineaPigC77 (talk) 17:03, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
replies: text: The "whether music was included is largely uncertain" is only in relation to the schooling of elite children, hence the beginnning of the sentence "Children of the elite received a comprehensive education in reading, writing, religion, the sciences, law and medicine, among other topics;". I've added "Outside of edubbas" to hopefully make this clearer? Aza24 (talk) 17:51, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
replies: text: Yes and it's also clear in the article - I just didn't read carefully enough, apologies. In that case, this section can be expanded because I'm finding great material on music in scribal schools. GuineaPigC77 (talk) 18:06, 26 August 2022 (UTC)
thread_title:  Music instruction in edubbas 

message: * The influence section is a bit confusing in its layout, though most thorough in it scope. The "Classical education also..." paragraph presumably refers to Classical Greek education, so feels like it should be in the Greece section.
* In general we (pun intended!) should be avoiding breaking the 4th wall with things like of "we can see" or "this shows us".
* The music theory section has improved a lot. I am little concerned about the "From this relief..." paragraph. I was under the impression that there was debate between scholars over which scales were used, but this provides a list via various sources—I may be mistaken in my presupposition. 
* The String section would be much more effective if each paragraph discussed only one instrument; at the moment information on harps, lyres and lutes is often overlapped, making the division confusing
* In general, the prose is not particularly fluid, probably a result of wanting to include as much information as possible. At some point, perhaps later in the process, you might consider requesting a copy edit from the WP:GOCE
* Will look further later. Aza24 (talk) 21:20, 10 October 2022 (UTC)
replies: text: I got that date from the original source that was there, but I remember thinking it was quite arbitrary. I'll let someone more knowledgable in Iranian history suggest an alternative? GuineaPigC77 (𒅗𒌤) ☕ 00:22, 17 October 2022 (UTC)
thread_title:  Comments on the Updates 

message: Hooray! 
Our reviewer sounded optimistic about an eventual FAC. I assume this means a lot more work, but I'm up for it. Perhaps the next step is to send to GOCE?
Thanks for y'all's guidance and patience showing me the ropes and how this process works. It's been fun and rewarding working together! GuineaPigC77 (𒅗𒌤) ☕ 16:43, 12 January 2023 (UTC)
replies: text: IMO the article prose is very well written and could stand to be nominated right now; GOCE certainly couldn't hurt but I don't think it's necessary to bring it to FA quality. Any remaining issues should easily be uncovered during the nomination itself.  Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:27, 17 January 2023 (UTC)
replies: text: @Iazyges Okay great to hear! In that case, I'll go ahead and nominate it. Anything special I need to do, or can I just follow Featured_article_candidates#Nominating. GuineaPigC77 (𒅗𒌤) ☕ 04:11, 18 January 2023 (UTC)
replies: text:   Just the instructions there will suffice. You may wish to add the others you worked with as co-nominators, but this is not required. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 04:27, 18 January 2023 (UTC)
thread_title:  What's next? 

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