Talk:Violence in art

message: I have written this page from scratch but it is now as complete as time currently available allows. It's probably a bit too long, so feel free to pitch in and tighten it up. David91 21:04, 26 May 2005 (UTC)
thread_title: 2005

message: I think its important to mention john woo, as well as the surrealists, and goya and rembrandt, all of whom dabbled in the "aestheticization of violence" and met with great success....
:This page is intended to be about the principles. One or possibly two examples would be acceptable but I am against simply turning the page into a catalogue of everyone who might or might not have aestheticised violence. Further, it would be a subjective and arbitratrary exercise to decide who to include or exclude. It is therefore better not to open Pandora's Box. David91 03:52, 5 March 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  John Woo? 

message: Hi, I put up the essay tag. This is an interesting topic, and the original essay obviously took a lot of work. Many of the supporting/contextual explanations AROUND the topic (e.g. Pierce) have legitimate sources. However the core concept, "aestheticization of violence" needs a definition that represents a consensus of experts (e.g. professors on Media studies/film studies/ media critics).  The current definition in the LEDE looks to me like OR (Original Research). IMHO, ideally (and I'd like to help in this regard), the LEDE should say something like "The concept of aestheticization of violence was first developed by Smith in her 1990 article "Aestheticization of violence", in which she argued that XXX XXX XXX. Although Smith defined the concept as XXX XXX, cultural theorist Jones, in her book Aesthetics and Violence (1994) suggests that the definition be nuanced to include the concept of YYY YYY."Nazamo 17:24, 13 October 2006 (UTC)
replies: text: But the lede is precisely not where to get into arguments over such fine distinctions ("nuances"). The lede as currently articulated offers a straightforward, noncontentious, and simple definition of the term, just as it should. It is part of the essential work of encyclopedia writers to summarize the general understanding of terms and present them as clearly and neutrally as possible in the introduction of an article. The crucial debates--which of course must be (a) presented fairly and (b) cited as appropriate--concern exactly what specific cultural artifacts or genres constitute the "aestheticization of violence." Those debates are properly surveyed below the lede. At the moment, it's entirely unclear what, if any, part of the entry reads "like a story or essay." I'm removing the tag pending the identification of unacceptably story- or essay-like elements within the body of the entry. —DCGeist 21:44, 13 October 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  "Essay Tag" 

message: I'm appending here Nazamo's comment to me about the current condition of the article. I'll say briefly that (a) the article does not strike me as a "content fork," as the aestheticization of violence is a substantial and relatively discreet topic within the very broad field of aesthetics. On the other hand, (b) I agree fully with Nazamo that the article should survey a few different sources for the term, preferably in the first section following the lede.
:Hi Dan, this note is about the aestheticization of violence article, which I tagged with the Essay template. Regardless of whether or not the article should have an Essay tag, I believe that there are still problems with it. This article may be "A content fork"..("usually an unintentional creation of several separate articles all treating the same subject").  Perhaps there is a broader article on aesthetics this could go into. Wiki guidelines state that "...content forks and POV forks are undesirable on Wikipedia, as they avoid consensus building and violate one of our most important policies." As well, the article doesn't lay out the different sources of the term "aesthetics of violence" (as in "Professor Jones, the author of six books on aesthetics of violence, defines the term as XXXX. In contrast, Smith defines it as YYYYY.")Nazamo 18:13, 16 October 2006 (UTC)
thread_title:  Article status/structure 

message: Hi, I am concerned that this article may contain original research. According to Wiki policies, "Original research is a term used in Wikipedia to refer to material that has not been published by a reliable source. It includes unpublished facts, arguments, concepts, statements, or theories, or any unpublished analysis or synthesis of published material that appears to advance a position — or which, in the words of Wikipedia's co-founder Jimbo Wales, would amount to a "novel narrative or historical interpretation."...Wikipedia is not the place for original research. Citing sources and avoiding original research are inextricably linked: the only way to demonstrate that you are not doing original research is to cite reliable sources that provide information directly related to the topic of the article, and to adhere to what those sources say.The Wiki policy goes on to list examples, such as "... introduc[ing] an analysis or synthesis of established facts, ideas, opinions, or arguments in a way that builds a particular case favored by the editor, without attributing that analysis or synthesis to a reputable source". As such, when an editor discusses the "Kelllian cognitive map (sometimes known as the semantic map)" in the article, I worry that this may be original research, unless an expert source on aestheticization of violence (e.g. a professor of film theory/ media criticism, etc.) has stated that the "Kellian cognitive map" is an appropriate analytical method.Nazamo 18:57, 17 October 2006 (UTC)
thread_title: No Original research

message: I have removed the link to 'martial arts' at the bottom of the page, as it has nothing to do with the ultraviolence/aesthetic violence phenominon, other than it is sometimes (unrealistically) used as a medium.
Most times, martial arts teaches non-violence or prevention
over violence.
--69.138.61.168 00:38, 28 October 2006 (UTC)
thread_title: Martial Arts and Ultraviolence

message: Nazamo: comparing the version of the lead to this article immediately before your first edit (7 Sep), with the lead as it currently stands (24 Oct), I wonder whether you can reintroduce the earlier format (or similar), incorporating your content? Declare 05:22, 24 October 2006 (UTC)
thread_title: Feedback (lead only)

message: I was missing a mention of Irréversible and Natural Born Killers here. Or is that too clicheed? MadMaxDog 02:49, 26 May 2007 (UTC)
thread_title: Ideas

message: Some users suggested to merge the Ultraviolence article with this one after a proposed deletion. As I said at the A Clockwork Orange article, I'm no expert on the subject though I created the Ultraviolence article, so I think someone who knows the subject better than me is more adequate for aiding on a merge here. I'll put what I consider relevant to merge here, if it's needed (sorry if it's unnecessary, but I really don't know how the merge will happen).
Ultraviolence is a term used roughly to describe acts of excessive and/or unjustified violence. The term was coined by Anthony Burgess in his novel A Clockwork Orange, where the main character Alex DeLarge and his gang of "droogs" roam the streets committing violent crimes out of enjoyment, including rape and murder, referred to as "do[ing] the ultra-violent". 
This sense of aesthetic violence has led to the term's usage in media, i.e. criticism regarding the representation of violence as enjoyable spectacle. The term "ultraviolence" has been applied to several works of entertainment such as the Saw series, Hostel, GANTZ, and the Manhunt game series. 
(and some links from the external links section which I consider relevant for this article as well:)
* Clockwork Orange and the Aestheticization of Violence
* Screening Violence Film theory appoach to ultraviolence in the media
*UltraViolent Atrocities Saturate Pop Culture
Kreachure (talk) 16:27, 21 January 2008 (UTC)
thread_title:  Merge with Ultraviolence 

message: Is it just me, or does the matrix deserve to be mentioned here because of its fight scene choreography?  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 88.91.90.2 (talk) 13:01, 7 August 2008 (UTC)
thread_title: The Matrix

message: This is a fine article indeed. Except it should be put up somewhere else on the internet and then referenced by Wikipedia.
Just one example: Aestheticization_of_violence#Analysis_of_selected_films. Who did the selection? And who compiled the snippets of analysis, integrating them into a larger whole? The Wikipedia contributor(s), that's who.
Regards, Zapp
PS. And yes, I've noticed the old discussion on the essay tag. CapnZapp (talk) 12:43, 26 June 2009 (UTC)
thread_title:  Essay 

message: Hi, I relocated this section. I call it unsourced in the heading. Let me clarify. Yes, the paragaph cites Seymour Feshbach, but there is no reference to a specific article or book. As well, based on my understanding of the WP:OR rules (which may be faulty, but it is the way I understand it), we can't do a novel synthesis of material. I don't think that we can apply the Feshbach form of analysis to "The Accused". If Professor XYZ does it, and we have a source, yes we can. For example: "According to Professor XYZ, a film theory expert, "The Accused" is an example of Feshbach-style sensitization to violence  Article name journal etc ...." Now while I don't think the Feshbach or WWE material can go in the analysis of "The Accused", it could be in the general article sectionOnBeyondZebrax (talk) 00:07, 19 November 2009 (UTC)
thread_title:  Possibly Original Research...it is unsourced 

message: It seems to me that this article doesn't take care to avoid bias- It relies on the premise that there is a generally accepted definition of what " stylistically excessive" IS....Of course, there isn't.
Also, the writer assumes that the purpose and intent of the aforementioned works are to beautify/promote violence.  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.9.70.242 (talk) 06:11, 11 September 2013 (UTC)
thread_title:  Polarized title? 

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thread_title:  External links modified 

message: I would propose trimming down text dedicated to film. It is relatively new form of art that historically speaking spans very short period. We should expand other sections.Unkwsold (talk) 12:20, 8 April 2020 (UTC)
replies: text: Agreeing 100%. It's a good read, but is lacking something. Mejorasi723 (talk) 10:23, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
thread_title:  Violence in film 

message: And now I am not sure how to get back where I was, it seems like something is missing. Can someone take me back to my version? Unkwsold (talk) 18:54, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
replies: text: I looked at the history.. Were you told why all those edits were reverted? Mejorasi723 (talk) 10:26, 15 December 2020 (UTC)
thread_title:  Editor reverted my edits 

message: Hello! I'm studying Technical Editing and have selected this article to help refine as part of our curriculum. I am by no means an expert on this topic, so my edits will consist of tone and format rather than content - I'll do my best to preserve information that hasn't already been deemed extraneous by prior commenters. I will be using the sandbox feature to test my edits prior to making edits to the actual article, and will update the talk page with my progress and proposed edits. At present, my plans to edit consist of minor grammatical issues as well as the following issues:
In early comments, the issue of excessive quotations was raised. If this is still a concern, would it be acceptable to paraphrase and rewrite quotations that still exist (obviously keeping the reference to the source)? At present, the text seems disjointed and hard to read due to being so broken up by quotations, and I believe rewrites would lend to a better flow.
Additionally, I agree with prior comments that the lead is still difficult to read and doesn't represent the rest of the article. In addition, the definition of aestheticization of violence by Margaret Bruder only discusses film. It is unclear if this definition is meant to represent art as a whole - I can see from earlier comments that defining aestheticization of violence was an issue. It may be worthwhile to establish a section simply to consolidate definitions of aestheticization of violence, as employed in Romanticism in Scotland
Additionally, the heading/subheading of "Theories and semiotic analysis"/"Semiotic analysis" seems excessive, as there are no other theories that are discussed. I propose simply naming the section "semiotic analysis" and doing away with the subheading.
My goal is not to trim down the article, as it seems disproportionately slim in certain areas (such as the discussion of history in art) - it almost feels as though the article was pared down to the bare essentials of information. While I don't intend to add unneeded text, I will attempt to bulk up the discussion of the history of art to help the article flow and read less like a bulleted list.
I look forward to collaboratively editing this article, and hearing back from fellow editors with feedback.Txrharvey (talk) 05:38, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
thread_title:  Editing Plans 

message: I added a hyperlink to Revolutions of 1848 in the discussion of Wagner's quote - while it was written in 1849, I believe the revolutions and events referenced in the article are known as the Spring of Nations/Revolutions of 1848 (which did bleed over in 1849).
Edited the discussionn of High Culture to give it more substannce beyond copying direct quotes. 
Rewrote sections that I found to be close paraphrasing - to see which sections I'm referencing, I noted in the edit summary.
Rewrote sections of Film for tone, edited out unnecessary quotes that only were detailing rave reviews, focused on quotes that furthered topic of the article.
Deleted unnecessary subheading in Theories section - if there is more discussion and variance of content, the subheading may be necessary. As of right now, only film is being discussed
Could the Heading "Power of Representation" be altered? as of right now I don't know what it means or what it is referencing. Initially I would have suggested "Modern Examples" (in contrast with the History section), but there is discussion of historical representations as well.Txrharvey (talk) 02:47, 15 March 2021 (UTC)
thread_title:  Editing implementations

message: In revisiting this page, I have a few follow up questions/suggestions. As for the film subsection - why is this information located here? There is an article already regarding violence in film. If the qualifying element is that the use of violence is more artistic in nature than Graphic violence, this needs to be more clear in the discussion. Otherwise, my recommendation is to relegate discussion of graphic violence in film to the more suitable article. Furthermore, the headings/subheadings setup for Theories and semiotic analysis is lacking, and the text does not fit the title - or at least, having a heading/subheading seems unnecessary, as there is only one subheading located within it. Would a better title be "Semiotic analysis in film"? Finally, I can understand why the Power in representation>High culture>film heading set exists. However, how can "Power in representation be revised, as now the title is ambiguous. Could "Effects" or "Effects of the aestheticization of violence" be effective?
looking back to getting feedback soon! Txrharvey (talk) 14:36, 5 May 2021 (UTC)
thread_title: Revisiting Edits