Talk:The Other Woman (Lost)

message: * "seventy-fifth episode overall that was aired on March 6, 2008" - another exhausting TV marathon :-)
Plot:
* Suggestion: It should be fairly easy to add a sense of time for when the individual flashback moments occured - 2001 and then October(?) 2004. This helps to give the "December 2004" date better context
* The last three sentences of the first Plot paragraph sound like stop and go, and should be combined into two sentences
* The focus of the sentence "In the jungle, Juliet is approached..." is somehow "off". It seems to switch between Juliet, Harper and a narrator.
* "After they find her..." - who is "they"? (I know who, but the sentence doesn't make it really clear.)
* The sentences about Daniel and the computer-typing are too detailed - at least one sentence can be removed there and it would still make sense
* "Desmond Hume's (Henry Ian Cusick) girlfriend Penny's (Sonya Walger) father" -> the father of Desmond Hume's (Henry Ian Cusick) girlfriend Penny (Sonya Walger) - I don't think the genitive clause twice in a row is a good idea
* "Ben hands over a file containing information..." - begin the sentence with "After", and the rest will fall into places (prose suggestion)
Production:
* Mitchell said that "it emotionally draining - word missing
* "until four in the morning" - add "o'clock" or something similar
* the information about Ana Lucia sounds extremely pointless until later in the paragraph - consider putting the sentence "Juliet was conceived by the writers as the next possible love interest for Jack" before that (and do a quick rewrite) to give context for the Ana Lucia information
* The last two sentences of the paragraph should be moved somewhere to the front of the paragraph. They currently appear like an afterthough, when in fact they would be ideal to get the reader into the mood for the paragraph
* Too many quotes in that paragraph (but the information is good) - variety helps
* generally: Every sentence seems to begin with the actors' or characters' names - some words like "After", "Although", "Nevertheless" or something usually help (prose suggestion if you want to take this to FAC)
Reception:
* "When hyping the episode, Elizabeth Mitchell said..." this sentence does not really belong in the reception section, but rather (if at all) in the production section. Also, I think the word "hyping" is not exactly encyclopedic tone
* Patrick Day of the Los Angeles Times called it "the weakest episode of the new season so far" -> this quote has no trademark feeling to it, so it shouldn't be quoted
* the reviews seem to jump around a lot in opinion: weakest, so-so, 2nd weakest, subpar, Roth bad, enjoy, Roth good, awesome, not impressed, worst - group this
* Suggestion (I don't know at this point whether this would make the article better or worse): move the reception information about the recurring/guest characters behind the claims of this being a Ben- instead of a Juliet episode. I think the Ben section is the juiciest of the whole section, so it shouldn't come so late.
Image FU rationales and the refs are good. I'll put this article on hold until the above concerns are reasonably addressed (within the next seven days). Concerns marked as suggestions are just peer-review-y suggestions and don't need to be addressed if you think they are bad or are un-actionable otherwise. Please consider reviewing another GAN as time permits, to keep the number of reviewed and to-be-reviewed articles balanced. – sgeureka t•c 21:42, 10 March 2008 (UTC)
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