Talk:Mary Garrett

message: Our plan is to improve her article(now a stub) and add much more details - we will write a structured biography, look into her different roles of feminist, philanthropist, daughter, leader, social-reformer and so on.
A list of sources we may use:
# Sander's Mary Elizabeth Garrett: Society and Philanthropy in the Gilded Age
#  The American Historical Review on Mary Elizabeth Garrett: Society and Philanthropy in the Gilded Age
# "Johns Hopkins and the Feminist Legacy: How a Group of Baltimore Women Shaped American Graduate Medical Education"
#  "Henry Barton Jacobs, William Osler’s intimate friend" 
#  "Raising the bar: Mary Elizabeth Garrett, M. Carey Thomas, and The Johns Hopkins Medical School"
- Tingtingou (talk) 19:55, 2 March 2017 (UTC)
thread_title: Plan of Contribution

message: First of all, I think you have a very strong article! I'll start first with the things that I really liked about your article. I really liked how complete your article is. You do a really good job of covering all parts of Mary's life, from childhood to philanthropy. I also think this article has very good pictures (with one small exception, which I'll discuss later). I think that you do a good job of citing, and at the right places. I also think that you do a good job of balancing the article out--you talk equally about her personal life/childhood as you do about her philanthropy. I also like how you can connect Mary's personal life (i.e. friendships) to the philanthropy side of her life. There are only a few things that I saw that could make your article even stronger than it is. First of all, you talk a little bit about Mary's memoir and how she mentioned that she had a problem with her bone. I'm wondering if it mentioned at all WHAT the problem was, and how/whether it affected her decision to donate the money to Johns Hopkins. Another thing I might mention is the picture of Mary's father. I realize that these articles require pictures, but I'm a little confused on why there is a picture of Mary's father. It is interesting that her father's job had a big effect on her philanthropy, but I think the spot could be used for another picture of Mary (perhaps at a young age, or a picture of Mary AND her father!) And yes, I realize this may be impossible considering the time period because, but is just a thought! There's a sentence in your article, under Adolescence that doesn't seem grammatically correct: "Besides, she kept all the letters from her friends, including Julia, Elizabeth and her relatives." Maybe it's the beginning of the sentence that makes it seem random. I think you should improve the sentence to make it connect a little better to the previous sentence. Another small suggestion I have is to maybe equate some of the dollar exchange rates between the 1800s and the current time. You say that Mary donates $300,000 to Johns Hopkins, but in our time $300,000 doesn't seem like a lot to donate in order to get your name. I am interested in knowing how much that equated to in her lifetime. Also, one last thing I might suggest, which is the biggest suggestion, is her connection to Johns Hopkins. While you do a good job of writing equal parts of her personal life and her philanthropy, I feel as if the amount that you talk about Johns Hopkins is kind of overshadowed by all the other philanthropy that Mary deals with. Considering this is also an article for a Johns Hopkins class, I think this is another reason to expand your portion on Johns Hopkins. Some questions that you might consider asking are: Who are the people that she dealt with at Hopkins? Did she ever visit Hopkins to oversee that everything she wanted was done? Are there any institutions at Hopkins named after her? Did she ever get her picture hung at Hopkins? Did she have a relationship with Hopkins after everything was completed? Is there any connection between Hopkins and all the other philanthropies that Mary donated to? I realize some of these questions may be hard to ask, and the fact that there are more questions out there, but I think they are some questions that would make the article even more interesting. Overall, this is very well written and I enjoyed reading your draft. I look forward to reading your final article on Mary as well! -Polly Berman Pajberman (talk) 03:28, 24 April 2017 (UTC)
thread_title: peer edit

message: - Move death section to after her career
 - add citation to first few sentences of "Adolescence" section
Mchang47 (talk) 16:49, 26 April 2017 (UTC)
thread_title:  Peer Review