Complex sentence: The band were then approached by Ollie Hartnett (a local milkman) who expressed an interest in managing the band, this offer was accepted by the members and Ollie set about booking the band's future shows.
Split into simpler sentences: The band were then approached by Ollie Hartnett (a local milkman) who expressed an interest in managing the band. This offer was accepted by the members and Ollie set about booking the band's future shows.