Complex sentence: During "Casino Royale's" final draft stages, Fleming allowed his friend William Plomer to see a copy, who remarked "so far as I can see the element of suspense is completely absent".
Split into simpler sentences: During "Casino Royale's" final draft stages Fleming allowed his friend William Plomer to see a copy. Plomer remarked: "so far as I can see, the element of suspense is completely absent".