Complex sentence: Approximately 42 percent of the members of the Cadet Corps receive a commission in the United States Armed Forces upon graduation; when off-campus commissioning sources are included, such as the Marine Corps Platoon Leaders Class, that percentage climbs to over 50 percent.
Split into simpler sentences: Approximately 42 percent of the members of the Cadet Corps receive a commission in the United States Armed Forces upon graduation. However, when off campus commissioning sources are included, such as the Marine Corps Platoon Leaders Class, that percentage climbs to over 50 percent.