Forum: english.stackexchange.com
Tags: <sentence>
Title: How would I say this sentence correctly?
Question: After six months of looking for jobs,  she got a reply from a job application  she posted online from Macy's asking  her to come to a interview.   The sentence does not sound right to me, what would be the correct way to say this?

Answers:
sents: text: I am not quite sure as to the need for highlighting the fact that she has been looking for job for 6 months.
text: How about :- Macy's responded to her online job application inviting her for an interview.
text: However, if you do need to highlight the 6 month search, then one option i can think of might be :- Her 6 month job search has culminated in Macy's inviting her for an interview in response to her online application
answer_details: author: english.stackexchange.com/users/2761/Jagmag
score: 4
sents: text: I suggest you drop 'from a job application' as it is pretty much implied.
text: After six months of looking for a job, she finally got a reply from Macy's asking her to come for an interview.
answer_details: author: english.stackexchange.com/users/2472/Olivier Lalonde
score: 3
sents: text: You can start by using the correct article "an" when referring to "interview."
answer_details: author: english.stackexchange.com/users/None/
score: 2
sents: text: You would be better to use "through" than "from" here: After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply through a job application
text: she posted online from Macy's asking her to come to a interview.
text: Better still: After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's (through an application she had posted online) asking her to come to a interview.
answer_details: author: english.stackexchange.com/users/2303/Robusto
score: 1
sents: text: I'd try to simplify: An online job application finally got her an interview at Macy's after six long months of looking.
text: This places the fact of the application being online front and center.
text: If the time period is to be emphasized:
text: She looked for six long months before an online job application finally got her an interview at Macy's.
answer_details: author: english.stackexchange.com/users/574/Ken Redler
score: 1
sents: text: After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's regarding a job application she had posted online, asking her to come to a interview.
answer_details: author: english.stackexchange.com/users/2762/T.R.
score: 1
sents: text: After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's to an online job application asking her to come in for an interview.
answer_details: author: english.stackexchange.com/users/None/
score: 1

Summary of the answers:
There is no clear "correct" way of phrasing this sentence and the answer will be highly subjective. However, there are number of changes that might be worthwhile. Firstly, it is questionable as to whether the fact that she has been looking for a job for 6 months needs to be highlighted. It is also possible to drop "job application" since it is implied, and the word interview will need the correct article "an".
There are several possible options to rephrase the sentence. Some suggested highlighting certain elements, some suggested replacing words such as "from" with "through". A grammatical error was identified in " a interview". There are numerous ways to rephrase the sentence to make it clearer with suggestions provided such as " After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's regarding a job application she had posted online, asking her to come to a interview"
There is no clear "correct" way of phrasing this sentence and the answer will be highly subjective. However, there are number of changes that might be worthwhile. Firstly, it is questionable as to whether the fact that she has been looking for a job for 6 months needs to be highlighted. It is also possible to drop "job application" since it is implied, and the word interview will need the correct article "an".
After six months of looking for jobs, she got a reply from Macy's to an online job application, asking her to come in for an interview.
Suggested alternatives include "After six months of looking for a job, she finally got a reply from Macy's asking her to come for an interview" and "Macy's responded to her online job application inviting her for an interview".
There are many different ways to re-write this sentence and the answer will be highly subjective. One suggestion could be "Macy's responded to her online job application inviting her for an interview".