4766 Alfred 69.55 The Broadcast TWT ID is present when the Broadcast field is 1, however the functionality of the Broadcast TWT ID depends on the value of the Wake TBTT interval value. If the value is then this is a broadcast TWT element. If the value is 1 then this is a TWT request/response that is negotiating the broadcast TWT IDs of that (those) particular value(s). As in comment. Impacts also the paragraph that describes the definition of Wake TBTT Negotiation in the next paragraph (which as is refers only to when the Broacast is and need to add the case when broadcast is 1). Also to generalize call this field something else (as Wake TBTT is restrictive now). Also please make these changes to all those fields that depend on these settings in the remaining paragraphs of this subclause. Revise – TGax editor to make changes as shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 4766 5034 Ghosh 69.51 It is mentioned that there are one or multiple TWT Parameter sets within a TWT element when Broadcast field is 1; for efficient parsing, it is beneficial to add an indication of the number of the TWT Parameter sets included within the TWT element Please include signaling of the number of TWT Parameter sets in a TWT element Revise – TGax editor to make changes as shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 5034 5327 75.49 for that TWTs Replace with "for that TWT(s)" Accept 5673 Guoqing Li 72.35 This paragraph says how to set Broadast ID for broadcast TWT. However, in secton 27.7.3.4, line 46 and 58, it indicates that broadcast ID is reserved. clarify so that it is consistent with section 27.7.3.4 Revise – add text in the field description that the field is reserved when transmitted by a scheduled STA. TGax editor shall make the changes shown in that are marked with CID 5673. 0 0 0 0
description of using temporary channel in an HE STA 5769 Hanseul Hong 75.24 It says "A TWT requesting STA sets the TWT Protection subfield to if TWT protection by RAW allocation is not requested for the corresponding TWT(s)". However, an HE STA, TWT Protection subfield may be set to 1 to enable the NAV protection given by 802.11ax. Delete the sentence or change 'A TWT requesting STA' to 'A S1G TWT requesting STA' Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 5769. 5832 Huizhao Wang 69.64 Paragraph starting from line 64 is completely incomprehencable. It seems trying to describe the TWT element with broadcast = 1, how to determine the wake TBTT and listen interval, but it has failed to describe it clearly Add graphs, and equations to show how to calculate the next wake TBTT and listen intervals between beacons Reject – the information here is complete and concise as a description of the field. It is not intended to provide the commenter’s requested behavioral descsription, the exact use of these fields is found in 27.7.3.4, which is already referenced here. 5833 Huizhao Wang 69.31 Target Wake Time size should be either 8 or 2 octects Change "8 or 0" to "8 or 2" Revise – other changes have caused a separate diagram to be created, so the change is effected in spirit, but differently than suggested - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 5833. 0 0 0
5834 Huizhao Wang 70.34 The description for TWT Setup command of Request TWT is not clear. It should just simply say that for Request TWT command, the Target Wake Time field should be set to zero. Replace the text: "The Target Wake Time of the TWT element contains 0s as the TWT responding STA specifies the target wake time value for this case,". With following simple text: "Target Wake Time field shall set to zero." Reject – the group has this language in place because when the language was not present, there were questions about how there could be a request without providing a TWT Time value in the request and the language certainly does not make things more difficult to understand, but rather, provides an explanation that clears up the question of why 0s is appropriate. 5835 Huizhao Wang 73.16 Deliver sounding feedback in TWT SP time may impact the performance of HE TxBF. The sounding feedback carries the channel matrix information of the moment of sounding NDP is received, need to timely delivered to the beamformer without delay, so using TWT SP time to deliver it will likely cause extra delays. Remove: "Frames that are sent as part of a sounding feedback exchange (see 27.6 (HE sounding protocol))" Reject – nothing in the statements here suggest that the sounding frames were sent at any significant time preceding the delivery of the feedback. It is much more probable that the TWT is for PS STA which are only waking at the TWT SP and therefore, the sounding PPDUs are transmitted in the same TWT SP as the feedback. Even if sounding were in one SP and FB in a later one, that is an implementation choice. 5836 Huizhao Wang 73.42 Deliver sounding feedback in TWT SP time may impact the performance of HE TxBF. The sounding feedback carries the channel matrix information of the moment of sounding NDP is received, need to timely delivered to the beamformer remove: "Frames that are sent as part of a sounding feedback exchange (see 27.6 (HE sounding protocol))" Reject – nothing in the statements here suggest that the sounding frames were sent at any significant time preceding the delivery of the feedback. It is much more probable that the TWT is for PS STA 0 0 0 zero
without delay, so using TWT which are only waking at the TWT SP and therefore, the sounding PPDUs are transmitted in the same TWT SP as the feedback. Even if sounding were in one SP and FB in a later one, that is an implementation choice. 5856 Hyunhee Park 73.31 Mistake in word "STAT". Replace with "STA" Accept 5865 Hyunhee Park 73.14 Mistake in section number "25.14 (Link adapration using the HE variant HE Control field)". Replace with section number "25.14 (Link adapration using the HE variant HE Control field)". Revise – proposed change from commenter is misleading, but the spirit of the comment is understood and accepted, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 5866 Hyunhee Park 73.40 Mistake in section number "25.14 (Link adapration using the HE variant HE Control field)". Replace with section number "25.14 (Link adapration the HE variant HE Control field)". Revise – proposed change from commenter is misleading, but the spirit of the comment is understood and accepted, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 5892 James Yee 69.69 Here and elsewhere, "field is 1" should be "field is set to 1" As suggested. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 5892. 5904 James Yee 73.14 Reference to "25.14" should be to "27.13" As suggested. Accept - TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this in time as D1.2 already has the 0 0 0 0 0
6350 John Coffey 71.04 Unclear wording: "... contains 0s as the TWT ..." looks at first sight as if the TWT whatever contains 0s. In context it seems that the "as" means "because" here. The stray clause tacked on at the end by a comma doesn't help. Change "as" to "because". Revise – generally agree with comment but language is changed significantly - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6350. 6351 John Coffey 71.04 The sentence in the column has independent clasues linked by a comma without a coordinating conjunction. This is ungrammatical usage and it hurts clarity. Change the comma to a semicolon. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6351. 6352 John Coffey 73.09 Garbled text: "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field". Change "is" to "in". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6352. 6353 John Coffey 73.34 Garbled text: "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field". Change "is" to "in". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6353. 6354 John Coffey 74.04 Anthropomorphism: "the TWT requesting STA expects". The STA is an object and does not "expect" anything. Reword to remove the Reject – is corporations are people, then it follows that STAs are people, see USA supreme court cases which established these facts almost 200 years ago: – 17 U.S. 518 (1819) and – 125 U.S. 181 (1888) – also note that neither the 802.11 style guide nor the IEEE SA style guide
mentions whatever that means… and furthermore, the entity in question, perhaps best described as an algorithm, has definite expectations of future events and as evidenced by the commenter’s lack of a decent alternative, there seems to be no word in the English language that would make a decent substitute for “expects” in thi case 6355 John Coffey 74.07 Anthropomorphism: "the TWT requesting STA expects". The STA is an object and does not "expect" anything. Reword to remove the Reject – is corporations are people, then it follows that STAs are people, see USA supreme court cases which established these facts almost 200 years ago: – 17 U.S. 518 (1819) and – 125 U.S. 181 (1888) – also note that neither the 802.11 style guide nor the IEEE SA style guide mentions whatever that means… and furthermore, the entity in question, perhaps best described as an algorithm, has definite
expectations of future events and as evidenced by the commenter’s lack of a decent alternative, there seems to be no word in the English language that would make a decent substitute for “expects” in thi case 6356 John Coffey 74.21 Inconsistent / "wicked which": here we have "which corresponds", whereas in most other places in the draft we have "that corresponds". Change "which" to "that". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6356. 6357 John Coffey 74.27 Inconsistent usage / "wicked which": here we have "which corresponds", whereas in most other places in the draft we have "that corresponds". Change "which" to "that". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6357. 6358 John Coffey 74.36 Independent clauses linked by a comma without a coordinating conjunction. Change to semicolon. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6358. 6359 John Coffey 74.43 Superfluous ", is not present". Delete comma. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6359. 6360 John Coffey 74.59 Missing space: "BSS.The". Add Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 6360.
either or 8 octets only. editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7361. 7362 Kwok Shum Au 74.25 For the sentence "When a TWT responding STA or a TWT scheduling STA with to transmits a TWT element to the TWT requesting STA ...", it means is required. However, cannot be found in this amendment (11ax D1.0), 11mc Draft 8.0 or 11ah Draft 10.0. Add in subclause C.3. Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7362. 7551 Chu 74.04 Change to "In a TWT element transmitted by a TWT requesting or scheduled STA, the TWT wake interval is equal to the average time that the TWT requesting STA or TWT scheduled STA expects to elapse between successive TWT SPs." As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7551. 7553 Liwen Chu 74.55 temorary primary channel? As in comment Reject – nothing can be found in the draft which matches the description. 7598 Chu 73.04 Add Ack/BA as the responding frame from scheduled STA. It makes no sense to only do sounding without data frame transmission. As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7598.
7599 Liwen Chu 73.30 Add Ack/BA as the responding frame from scheduled STA. It makes no sense to only do sounding without data frame transmission. As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7599. 7600 Liwen Chu 72.53 Add the following restriction "The AP doesn't transmit a TIM frame or a FILS discovery frame including a TIM element at the beginning of the TWT SP." As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7600. 7876 Mark RISON 73.14 "25.14 (Link adaptation using the HE variant HT Control field)" is a broken reference Refer to 27.13 instead Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 7877 Mark RISON 73.39 "25.14 (Link adaptation using the HE variant HT Control field)" is a broken reference Refer to 27.13 instead Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 7922 Mark RISON 69.63 "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield indicates" -- how exactly does it indicate this? Add similar sentences to the "The Broadcast field is 1 to indicate that the TWT SP(s) defined by the TWT element are associated with broadcast TWT(s). The Broadcast field is 0, otherwise." above Revise –generally with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in that are marked with CID 7922.
7923 Mark 72.37 " the TWT Flow Identifier subfield contains a value that indicates recommendations on the types of frames that are transmitted by scheduled STAs during the broadcast TWT SP, encoded according to Table 262k1" -- but that table discusses both the scheduling STA and scheduled STA Delete "scheduled" Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7923. 7924 Mark RISON 70.27 "Description when transmitted by a TWT scheduling STA, Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield = 1" is incompatible with " The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA." at line 2 above Change "1" to "0" Revise – deleting the earlier sentence is logically equivalent, simpler and easier to understand, as the fields have the same meaning when the Wake TBTT Negotiation bit is set to 1, regardless of whether requesting, responding, scheduled or scheduling STA sets the bit. TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7924. 7925 Mark RISON 70.27 Descriptions of the other four cases when Wake TBTT Negotiation Subfield = 1 and scheduling/scheduled when = 0) are missing Delete ", Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield = [0/1]" in each cell (4 deletions) Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7925. 7926 Mark RISON 70.43 Spurious asterisk Delete the asterisk Revise –generally agree with comment but other instances changed the asterisk to the words “see NOTE”, so that is what is proposed here - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in that are
marked with CID 7926. 7927 Mark RISON 71.30 There can be no TWT request to accept since a scheduled STA cannot make a request (see 70.35) Change the cell to "N/A" Reject – the accept outcome is also used to accept a suggest or demand. 7928 Mark 71.33 It says "(See" in the 4th column Change to "(see" Accept – TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7928. 7929 Mark RISON 73.22 are no restrictions on the frames transmitted by the schedul- ing STA of the broadcast TWT SP." -- but the scheduling STA is the AP, so the next para does introduce restrictions Delete the cited text; also at line 49. Also fix at line 56 to only refer to the scheduled STA Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7929. 7930 Mark RISON 73.09 "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field or in the HE variant HT Control field of the frame, " -- a PS-Poll cannot carry either At line 8 and line 33 change "PS-Poll and QoS Null frames" to "QoS Null frames and PS-Poll frames contained in Control Wrapper frames" Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 7930. 7931 Mark 73.45 There are 3 instances of "(Re-)Association" in the document Change each to "(Re)Association" Accept 7932 Mark RISON 73.58 There are 2 instances of "FILS discovery frame" in the document Change each to "FILS Discovery frame" Accept
8123 Matthew Fischer 70.03 The following text was not updated when the table of TWT commands and responses was updated for broadcast TWT negotiation: "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA." Missing definition for requesting and responding STA cases. Delete the cited line and change "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield indicates that the scheduled STA transmitting the TWT element is indicating a value for the next wake TBTT for a broadcast TWT" to "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield indicates that a scheduled STA transmitting the TWT element is indicating a requested value for the next wake TBTT for a broadcast TWT and a scheduling STA transmitting the element is indicating the next wake TBTT for the broadcast TWT. The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to by TWT Requesting and TWT Responding STAs." Revise – generally with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in that are marked with CID 8123. 8124 Matthew Fischer 69.36 figure 9-589av was not correctly updated to reflect changes made during CR that created D1.0 - Broadcast TWT changes allow a value of 2 octets for the Target Wake Time field, and this is not reflected in the TWT element diagram octet count label for the field Change the number of octets in the figure for the Target Wake Time to be 8 or 2 or 0. Revise – other changes have caused a separate diagram to be created, so the change is effected in spirit, but differently than suggested - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 8124. 8127 Matthew Fischer 70.34 The table entry for the first row for column wake tbtt negotiation is NA, but at P139 the text says that this box should not have NA value - also see P186L40 which does not mention REQUEST Make a decision - either do or do not allow request command by scheduled STA for Broadcast TWT - fix the different references so that they do not conflict. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 8127.
8197 Osama 69.30 There are sub-fields in the TWT IE having variable length. When repeating for each TWT parameter, how the information can be decoded given the variabe length of some of the sub-fields? Clarify Reject – the subfields are of different length for each field depends on the settings of other subfields, so that the size, format, length, etc of each repeated set of subfields is fully described by the bits within that set of subfields. 8198 Osama 70.50 The terms Scheduling STA and Scheduled STA need to be defined as in comment Duplicate of comment identified in Duplicate of CID column 8200 Osama 72.47 Table 9-262k1 seems to be totally arbitrary and is not based on any rationale. Perhaps some explanation is in order. either provide a rationale for the different restrictions or simply delete the table. My preference is to delete the table. Revise – generally agree with comment, table modified significantly to simplify - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 8200. 8510 Robert Stacey 74.11 Invalid Change 10.44.3.4 to 27.7.3.4 Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 8510. 8591 Sheng Sun 70.50 The terms Scheduling STA and Scheduled STA need to be defined as in comment Reject – definitions exist in 27.7.3.1 9126 LEE 73.14 Wrong section reference 25.14 (Link adaptation using the HE variant HT Control field) in the Table Flow Identifier field for a broadcast TWT element Change the wrong reference to the correct one Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 9127 LEE 73.40 section reference 25.14 (Link adaptation using the HE variant HT Control field) in the Table 9-262k1-TWT Flow Identifier field for a broadcast TWT element Change the wrong reference to the correct one Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has
the problem fixed per CID 4727. 9343 Tomoko Adachi 73.14 Wrong reference number. Change "25.14" to "27.13" and update the title of the subclause in brackets. Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 9344 Tomoko Adachi 73.40 reference number. Change "25.14" to "27.13" and update the of the subclause in brackets. Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 9843 Young Hoon Kwon 69.63 It is not clear the meaning when the Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to or 1. Need further clarification. As in the comment. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 9843. 9844 Young Hoon Kwon 73.30 Typo: STAT -> STA As in the comment. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 9844.
9971 Yuchen Guo 70.04 The expression "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA." is not correct. When the TWT scheduling STA transmits a TWT response frame as a response to a TWT request frame in the negotiation procedure of wake TBTT and listen interval, The value of the Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield should be equal to 1. The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to 1 in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA in the negotiation procedure of wake TBTT and listen interval, and set to otherwise. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r1 that are marked with CID 9971. 10142 yujin noh 73.14 wrong reference is shown. The reference 25.14 should be 27.13 (Link adaptation using the HE variant HT Control field) As in the comment. Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. 10143 yujin noh 73.40 wrong reference is shown. The reference 25.14 should be 27.13 (Link adaptation using the HE variant HT Control field) As in the comment. Revise – generally agree with the commenter, TGax editor to note that no change is necessary at this point in time as D1.2 already has the problem fixed per CID 4727. Discussion: TWT IE changes based on CIDs as shown above. Proposed Changes to Draft Text of TGax D1.2: