Editing instructions formatted like this are intended to be copied into the TGax Draft (i.e. they are instructions to the 802.11 editor on how to merge the text with the baseline documents). TGax Editor: Editing instructions preceded by “TGax Editor” are instructions to the TGax editor to modify existing material in the TGax draft. As a result of adopting the changes, the TGax editor will execute the instructions rather than copy them to the TGax Draft. CIDs 3031 Patil 70.04 A TWT Scheduling STA that is responding to a TWT request to setup a wake TBTT will see the TBTT Negotiation subfield value to 1. Also see section 27.7.3.4 (pg 186, line 48) Change the sentence to say that a TWT scheduling STA that is responding to a TWT request to setup a wake TBTT shall set the value of TBTT Negotiated subfield to 1. Revise – deleting the sentence is logically equivalent, simpler and easier to understand, as the fields have the same meaning when the Wake TBTT Negotiation bit is set to 1, regardless of whether requesting, responding, scheduled or scheduling STA sets the bit. TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 3031. 3123 Adrian 69.28 802.11ah defines the TWT element as extensible. .11ax indicates that the body of the element can be repeated for Broadcast, and presumably relies on the Length field to determine the number of such repeats. These are incompatible. Change the element ID definition to indicate it is not extensible, or add a count subfield in the Control field. Revise – TGax editor to make changes as shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 3123 0 0
4765 Alfred 69.32 are some issues in this Figure. First some parts are missing (TWR field is 8, 2, or 0 in length, Broadcast TWT ID needs to be underlined). Also in order to avoid confusion between a normal TWT element and a broadcast TWT element I suggest having two Figures, one for TWT element (with one TWT parameter set, as in baseline), and another one for broadcast TWT element (with one or more TWT parameter sets, this to be tied to the value broadcast = 1 and wake TBTT interval value 0). As in comment. Revise – TGax editor to make changes as in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 4765 4766 Alfred 69.55 The Broadcast TWT ID is present when the Broadcast is 1, however the functionality of the Broadcast TWT ID depends on the value of the Wake TBTT interval value. If the value is 0 then this is a broadcast TWT element. If the value is 1 then this is a TWT request/response that is negotiating the broadcast TWT IDs of that (those) particular value(s). As in comment. Impacts also the paragraph that describes the definition of Wake TBTT Negotiation in the next paragraph (which as is refers only to when the Broacast is and need to add the case when broadcast is 1). Also to generalize call this field something else (as Wake TBTT is restrictive now). Also please make these changes to all those fields that depend on these settings in the remaining paragraphs of this subclause. Revise – TGax editor to make changes as shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 4766 0 0
6051 Jarkko Kneckt 69.17 The Trigger in the TWT currently controls whether the AP shall send a Trigger to a STA in TWT SP. The TWT should not force AP to send Trigger frames, the Triggering should be taken into use when EDCA is not performing well and AP should have flexibility to control this transition. Delete the Trigger field in the Request Type field of the TWT element. Reject – while there could be an alternative to the current description of triggered TWT behavior, the one that exists is the one that was agreed upon, and other variations of TWT SP operation also exist within the draft. The current triggered TWT rules do not allow the operation suggested by the commenter because the current rules also recommend that the requesting STA does not send frames outside of the SP. What is being suggested is really, a proposal for a new mode of operation and would need a more complete description to be considered. 6089 Jian Yu 74.52 The ax contains description for 11ah draft without an clarification. For example, there is description for channel width of 1MHz and 2MHz for a BSS, whch seems very strange Refine the whole paragraph and clarify which part is for ax and which part is for ah. Maybe should also add ah spec as a reference Revise – generally with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in that are marked with CID 6089. 6350 John Coffey 71.04 Unclear wording: "... contains 0s as the TWT ..." looks at first sight as if the TWT whatever contains 0s. In context it seems that the "as" means "because" here. The stray clause tacked on at the end by a comma doesn't help. Change "as" to "because". Revise – generally agree with comment but language is changed significantly - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6350. 0 0
6351 John Coffey 71.04 The sentence in the fifth column has independent clasues linked by a comma without a coordinating conjunction. This is ungrammatical usage and it hurts clarity. Change the comma to a semicolon. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6351. 6352 John Coffey 73.09 Garbled text: "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field". Change "is" to "in". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6352. 6353 John Coffey 73.34 Garbled text: "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field". Change "is" to "in". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6353. 6354 John Coffey 74.04 Anthropomorphism: "the TWT requesting STA expects". The STA is an object and does not "expect" anything. Reword to remove the Reject – if corporations are people, then it follows that STAs are people, see USA supreme cases which established these facts almost 200 years ago: – 17 U.S. 518 (1819) and – 125 U.S. 181 (1888) – also note that neither the 802.11 style guide nor the IEEE SA style guide mentions whatever that means… and furthermore, the entity in question, perhaps best described as an algorithm, has definite expectations of 0 0 0 0
decent substitute for “expects” in this case 6363 John Coffey 75.50 The second case here is when the relevant STA is not an S1G STA, whereas earlier in the same section (P75 L20) the condition is "within an HE BSS". Is there some distinction intended? Can TWT be used in non-S1G, non-HE BSSs? Change "is not an S1G STA" to "is an HE STA". Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 6363. 7170 kaiying Lv 70.27 The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA. In table when transmitted by a TWT scheduling STA, Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield = 1", which is conflicted with the above statement. Please change to "Description when transmitted by a TWT scheduling STA, Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield =0." Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7170. 7184 kaiying Lv 75.02 change"TWT broadcast field"to"broadcast field" As in comment Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7184. 7208 kaiying Lv 71.04 the description about " Demand TWT" is incorrect. please clarify it Revise – generally with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in that are marked with CID 8125. 9- 0
that are marked with CID 7361. 7362 Kwok Shum Au 74.25 For the sentence "When a TWT responding STA or a TWT scheduling STA with equal to transmits a TWT element to the TWT requesting STA ...", it means is required. However, cannot be found in this amendment (11ax D1.0), 11mc Draft 8.0 or 11ah Draft 10.0. Add in subclause C.3. Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7362. 7551 Liwen Chu 74.04 Change to "In a TWT element transmitted by a TWT requesting or scheduled STA, the TWT wake interval is equal to the average time that the TWT requesting STA or TWT scheduled STA expects to elapse between successive TWT SPs." As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7551. 7598 Liwen Chu 73.04 Add Ack/BA as the responding from scheduled STA. It makes no sense to only do sounding without data frame transmission. As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7598. 7599 Chu 73.30 Add Ack/BA as the responding frame from scheduled STA. It makes no sense to only do sounding without data frame transmission. As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7599.
7600 Liwen Chu 72.53 Add the following restriction "The AP transmit a TIM frame or a FILS discovery frame including a TIM element at the beginning of the TWT SP." As in comment Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7600. 7922 Mark RISON 69.63 "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield indicates" -- how exactly does it indicate this? Add similar sentences to the "The Broadcast is 1 to indicate that the TWT SP(s) defined by the TWT element are associated with broadcast TWT(s). The Broadcast field is 0, otherwise." above Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7922. 7923 Mark 72.37 " the TWT Flow Identifier subfield contains a value that indicates recommendations on the types of frames that are transmitted by scheduled STAs during the broadcast TWT SP, encoded according to Table 262k1" -- but that table discusses both the scheduling STA and scheduled STA Delete "scheduled" Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7923. 7924 Mark RISON 70.27 "Description when transmitted by a TWT scheduling STA, Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield = 1" is incompatible with " The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA." at line 2 above Change "1" to "0" Revise – deleting the earlier sentence is logically equivalent, simpler and easier to understand, as the fields have the same meaning when the Wake TBTT Negotiation bit is set to 1, regardless of whether requesting, responding, scheduled or scheduling STA sets the bit. TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7924.
7925 Mark RISON 70.27 Descriptions of the other four cases when Wake TBTT Negotiation Subfield = 1 and scheduling/scheduled when = 0) are missing Delete ", Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield = [0/1]" in each cell (4 deletions) Revise –generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7925. 7926 Mark RISON 70.43 Spurious asterisk Delete the asterisk Revise –generally agree with comment but other instances changed the asterisk to the words “see NOTE”, so that is what is proposed here - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in that are marked with CID 7926. 7927 Mark RISON 71.30 There can be no TWT request to accept since a scheduled STA cannot make a request (see 70.35) Change the cell to "N/A" Reject – the accept outcome is also used to accept a suggest or demand. 7928 Mark 71.33 It says "(See" in the 4th column Change to "(see" Accept – TGax editor make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7928. 7929 Mark RISON 73.22 "There are no restrictions on the frames transmitted by the schedul- ing STA of the broadcast TWT SP." -- but the scheduling STA is the AP, so the next para does introduce restrictions Delete the cited text; also at line 49. Also fix at line 56 to only refer to the scheduled STA Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7929. 7930 Mark 73.09 "Feedback can be contained is the QoS Control field or in the HE variant HT Control field of the frame, " -- a PS-Poll cannot carry either At line 8 and line 33 change "PS-Poll and QoS Null frames" to "QoS Null frames and PS-Poll frames contained in Control Wrapper frames" Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 7930.
8123 Matthew Fischer 70.03 The following text was not updated when the table of TWT commands and responses was updated for broadcast TWT negotiation: "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA." Missing definition for requesting and responding STA cases. Delete the cited line and change "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield indicates that the scheduled STA transmitting the TWT element is indicating a value for the next wake TBTT for a broadcast TWT" to "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield indicates that a scheduled STA transmitting the TWT element is indicating a requested value for the next wake TBTT for a broadcast TWT and a scheduling STA transmitting the element is indicating the next wake TBTT for the broadcast TWT. The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to by TWT Requesting and TWT Responding STAs." Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 8123. 8124 Matthew Fischer 69.36 figure 9-589av was not correctly updated to reflect changes made during CR that created D1.0 - Broadcast TWT changes allow a value of 2 octets for the Target Wake Time field, and this is not reflected in the TWT element diagram octet count label for the field Change the number of octets in the figure for the Target Wake Time to be 8 or 2 or 0. Revise – other changes have caused a separate diagram to be created, so the change is effected in spirit, but differently than suggested - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 8124. 8127 Matthew Fischer 70.34 The table entry for the first row for column wake tbtt negotiation is NA, but at P139 the text says that this box should not have NA value - also see P186L40 which does not mention REQUEST Make a decision - either do or do not allow request command by scheduled STA for Broadcast TWT - fix the different references so that they do not conflict. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 8127.
8200 72.47 Table 9-262k1 seems to be totally arbitrary and is not based on any rationale. Perhaps some explanation is in order. either provide a rationale for the different restrictions or simply delete the table. My preference is to delete the table. Revise – generally agree with comment, table modified significantly to simplify - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 8200. 8591 Sheng Sun 70.50 The Scheduling STA and Scheduled STA need to be defined as in comment Reject – definitions in 27.7.3.1 9843 Young Hoon Kwon 69.63 It is not clear the meaning when the Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to or 1. Need further clarification. As in the comment. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 9843. 9971 Yuchen Guo 70.04 The expression "The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA." is not correct. When the TWT scheduling STA transmits a TWT response frame as a response to a TWT request frame in the negotiation procedure of wake TBTT and listen interval, The value of the Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield should be equal to 1. The Wake TBTT Negotiation subfield is set to 1 in TWT elements transmitted by a responding STA and by a scheduling STA in the negotiation procedure of wake TBTT and listen interval, and set to otherwise. Revise – generally agree with comment - TGax editor shall make the changes shown in 11-17/0777r6 that are marked with CID 9971. Discussion: TWT IE changes based on CIDs as shown above.