6466 95.55 Variant used for the same feature: "STA-2-STA operation". A matter of a few sentences earlier we have "STA-to-STA". Which is it? Change to Duplicate: CID 5344 6794 207.06 Incorrect (or at least unclear) use of definite article: "the STA-to-STA operation". Is there only one such STA-to-STA operation? Clarify. Revised: The text is revised to improve the clarity 7183 207.06 27.16.3 Does here has the same meaning with what is defined in 802.11-2016 "A peer-to-peer link is defined to be either a Direct Link within a QoS BSS, a TDLS, or a STA-to-STA communication in an IBSS." Please clarify it Duplicated: 5344 5744 207.07 "Can" is not a normative text, change to "should" Can-->Should Counter: Change “can” to “may”. 6793 207.06 Incorrect (or at least unclear) use of definite article: "the HE STA which". Is there only one such HE STA? Clarify. Revised: The test is revised to improve the clarity 207.07 "should" is ambiguous expression. Use "shall" or remove this sentence. Rejected: it is not a mandatory behaviour, it 1
can’t be a “shall” behaviour. 6797 207.19 Mismatched terms: "Quiet Time Period Operation (Figure 27-8 (Quieting time period operation)". Is is Quiet or Quieting? Pick one term and to it. Revised: 6799 207.52 Awkward phrasing: "with the matching dialog token and response token". Change to "with dialog toekn matching the response token" or some other less awkward wording. Accepted: 6801 207.57 Use of undefined term: "the Quite Time Period". Quite what? Change "Quite" to "Quiet". Accepted: 6802 207.57 Unclear and possibly garbled text: "the requested HE STA". What does this mean? Elsewhere in the same section we have "requester" HE STA so perhaps this is a misprint. Change "requested" to "requester". Accepted: 6803 207.57 Descriptive language used where it seems normative language must have been intended: the HE STA "can" transmit frames. The ability of the HE STA to transmit Change "can" to "may". Duplicated: 5744
even if we are allowed to, should we? What is gained? 9107 207.62 The following sentence "NOTE--The GAS protocol can be used by an HE STA to inform an AP the type of operations" does not read correctly and the grammar requires some correction. Change the cited setence to HE STA can use the GAS protocol to transport an element that informs an AP about the type(s) of STA-to-STA operations that the HE STA supports." Accepted 6809 208.05 Mandatory requirements embedded in optional mode: earlier it's stated that an AP "may" operate this way, but here we have a "shall". If this is just an illustrative example, it is confusing and inappropriate to have mandatory language included. Reword to eliminate the If the idea is to describe some sort of conditionally mandatory behavior, then reword the introductory language to make it clear that this is an optional mode rather than simly an illustrative example. Revised. Text is added to clause 27.16.4.1 to clarify the conditional mandatory behaviour. 6810 208.11 Mandatory requirements embedded in optional mode: earlier it's stated that an AP "may" operate this way, but here Reword to eliminate the "shall". If the idea is to describe some sort of conditionally mandatory behavior, then reword the Duplicate. [6809]
we have a "shall". If this is just an illustrative example, it is confusing and inappropriate to have mandatory language included. introductory language to make it clear that this is an optional mode rather than simly an illustrative example. 6813 208.23 Incorrect use of definite article: "to the value no larger". Is there just one? Change to "to a value no larger". Accepted. Discussion: [CID 5344, 5339, 6466, 7183] : Revised All “STA-to-STA” is replaced by the terminology define in 802.11-2016. [6794]: Revised: Text is updated according to the comment. [5477] : Accepted [6973] : Revised: Text is updated according to the comment. [10302] : Rejected: Since it is not a mandatory behavior, it can’t be a “shall” behavior. [6797]: Revised: Text is updated according to the comment. [6799]: Accepted: Text is updated according to the comment. [6801] : Accepted [6802] : Accepted [6803]: Duplicated. [5744] [6806] : Counter: Agree with the commentator that that vendor specific behavior is out of scope. But, to clarify the operation of the feature, the text is moved to the footnote as informational text. [9107] : Accepted.