conversations using grade-level-appropriate academic vocabulary for scientific discourse. Edits and Corrections: The following edits and corrections must be made as a condition of adoption: # Grade Level Component Page number(s) Current text Proposed corrected text Reason for edit 1 K TG: Weather and Sky SIS 1B “In the daytime sky. I can see…” “In the daytime sky, I can see…” Grammatical error, fragmented sentence 2 1 TG: Explaining Organisms 37 (multiple places) Finalize the list to make sure students understand that all living things move, grow, breathe, and need food. Finalize the list to make sure students understand that all living things move, grow, need air, reproduce, and need food. Factual error Saying that plants “breathe” is a misconception. All cells use oxygen and release carbon dioxide- but that is NOT the same as breathing. They all need “air”? 3 1 LR: Sky Watchers 12 In summer sunrise happens early. In summer, sunrise happens Grammatical error Missing a comma 4 1 LR: Sky Watchers 12 In winter the Sun rises later. In winter, the Sun rises later. Grammatical error Missing a comma 5 2 TG: Matter LA 3C Oh, no! Oh no! Grammatical error Remove the 6 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity 98 “magine you have to design an “Imagine you have to design an Typographical Missing a capital I to begin the sentence
7 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity SIS 4A (Take Home Science Letter) Take-Home Sicience Letter (footer) Take-Home Science Letter Typographical error Misspelled “science” 8 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity 144 the paper towel loosely crumpled in the habitat Leave the habitat…” “leave the paper towel loosely crumpled in the habitat. Leave the habitat…” Typographical Missing a period after “habitat” 9 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity 145 “For the best observation…” End of sentence is missing. Typographical/ grammatical error Sentence is incomplete 10 2 TG: Earth Materials Lesson 2 take-home activity “earth material:” “Earth Material” Grammatical error is always capitalized, proper noun 11 2 TG: Earth Materials 109 “Be sure that each group gets you approval” “Be sure that each gets your approval” Grammatical error Changing the pronoun 12 3 LR: Weather and Climate Patterns 6 “This process is call condensation.” “This process is called condensation.” Grammatical error 13 3 TG: Weather and Climate Patterns 71 62°F/ 5 = 62°F 310° F / 5 = 62° F Mathematical error 14 3 TG: Forces and Interactions Version “Literacy and and Science” (footer) “Literacy and Science” Grammatical error Extra “and” 15 3 TG: Forces and Interactions 159 “24 newtons”, “70 newtons” “27 newtons” (or change “circle the capital N” “24 Newtons,” “70 Newtons” “27 Newtons” (or omit that sentence) Misleading directions Contradicting directions 16 3 TG: Life in Ecosystems 50 “Ask them to discuss how ecosystems and life cycles relate to their …” End of sentence is missing Grammatical Sentence is incomplete
17 4 TG: Changing 58 “Students s are likely to suggest…” “Students are likely to suggest…” Typographical Unneeded “s” 18 4 TG: Changing Earth SIS 2C “Unique features if the rock:” “Unique features of the rock:” Typographical error Should be “of” not “if.” 19 4 TG: Energy Works SIS 5B “Do not to cut through the center of the “Do not cut through to the center of the paper!” OR “Do not cut through the center of the paper!” Typographical error Extra word in the sentence 20 4 TG: Plant and Animal Structures 41 “(If the seeds touch each other, there may not be enough space for theplants to grow.)” “(If the seeds touch each other, there may not be enough space for the plants to grow.)” Typographical error: space needed between “the” and “plants” 21 4 TG: Plant and Animal Structures SIS 2B:2: Teacher’s Version “What do you think is does?” “What do you think it does?” Grammatical error - wrong word/mistype 22 5 TG: Matter and Energy in Ecosystems 42 “(The tall trees shade theplants on the forest floor…)” “(The tall trees shade the plants on the forest floor…)” Grammatical error: space needed between “the” and “plants” 23 5 TG: Matter and Energy in Ecosystems 65 “A dissection is the cutting or taking apart of something to examine it and learn…” “A dissection is the cutting or taking apart of something once living to examine it and learn” Imprecise definition: for something to be “dissected,” it MUST have been living at some point.
24 5 TG: Earth and Space Systems 100-101 “Set out the inflatable globe and a bucket of water at the front of the room. Explain that you will perform a demonstration to help students visualize tides: a. Place the globe gently in the water so it is floating in the middle of the bucket. b. Put both of your hands on top of the globe and push the globe down into the water in a slow, firm motion. Then let the globe rise back up. You may need to repeat this a couple of times. Explain that the force you exert on the globe represents gravity acting on Earth.” Remove: incorrect Factual error: the force of pushing your hands down on an inflated ball in water has no relation to Earth’s tides. That would insinuate that the Earth’s gravitational pull is greater and less throughout the day, which is absolutely incorrect. 25 K-5 Innovators in Science Ellen Ochoa (11) “Currently, Ochoa is the director of NASA’s Johnson Space Center.” “Ochoa is the former director of NASA’s Johnson Space Center.” Factual error: Ochoa left the position in May 2018. 26 K-5 Innovators in Science Ian Joughin (16) “Ian Joughin is a pioneer in polar research. As a glaciologist at the University of Washington.” “Ian Joughin is a pioneer in polar research as a glaciologist at the University of Washington.” Grammatical error: Fragmented sentence 27 K-5 Innovators in Science Jocelyn Bell Burnell (19) “The lead scientist on Burnell’s team was awarded part of prize.” “The lead scientist on Burnell’s team was awarded part of the prize.” Typographical error Missing the word “the.”
28 K-5 Innovators in Science Neil DeGrasse (29) “He is well spoken, funny, and makes difficult topics easy to understand.” Change “funny” to “engaging.” Factual error: Information is not factual; it is an opinion. 29 3 TG: Life in Ecosystems 211 “The container may then be disposed of in the …” Complete the sentence Incomplete sentence 30 K TG: Living Things and Their Needs 86 “changes a slight as wearing down a path” “changes as slight as wearing down a path” Grammatical 31 3 TG: Forces and Interactions 35 noncontact non-contact spelling error 32 1 TG: Light and Sound Wave SIS 5A.1 “Construction paper does not make shadows.” (Proposed answer- No) “Construction paper does make shadows.” (Correct answer is Yes) Factual error 33 1 TG: Sky Watchers SIS 3A none Supply answers Answers are missing 34 1 TG: Sky Watchers SIS 3B none Supply answers Answers are missing 35 1 TG: Exploring Organisms SIS 1D Correct answer for “air” should include “nose.” “Nose” is not currently included as a correct answer for “air.” Factual 36 1 TG: Exploring Organisms SIS 1D Remove “mouth” as a correct answer for “space.” is currently a correct answer for “space.” Factual error 37 1 TG: Exploring Organisms 65 EXT “How many is that?” “uses multiples of ten” Remove phrase this does not involve multiples of ten. error 38 1 TG: Exploring Organisms 103 Question asks students to predict traits in next generation. Remove Factual It is unknown if the parent is homoallele or heteroallele, so this info should be included (different words).
39 1 TG: Exploring Organisms Summative Assessment Question #3 “Who does the twin look more like?” “Who does the identical twin look more like?” Factual error (twin could look more like Dad than twin if the twins are not identical). 40 2 TG: Matter 60 “Identify Phenomenon” note says that to crumple then flatten it out again is an example of a physical change. Physical changes are phase changes (such as melting ice), not changes in physical shape. Factual error- NGSS definition of “physical change” in PS1.B and is that heating and cooling causes changes that may be permanent. 41 2 TG: Matter, Phenomenon for Lessons 32, 50, 72, 90, 116, Three birds are building a house, using wood (not twigs), glue, ice, and throwing a party. Change all “birds” to “kids.” Factual error: Birds cannot use glue or throw a party. 42 2 TG: Matter, Phenomenon for Lesson 5 116 “Metal on roof (of bird house) begins to rust” Add “the” before “metal” Factual Type of metal needs to be specified because not all metal rusts, only metals containing iron.
48 2 TG: Matter, Extension “Candles in the Wind” Page 130 “Burning a candle is the result of heat energy.” “Burning a candle is NOT the result of heat energy.” Factual error 49 2 TG: Matter, Lit. Article 4B LA4B “Adobe can hold heat when cold and release heat when warm.” resists changes in temperature because it is an insulator.” Factual error: adobe is not a heat pump. 50 2 TG: Matter, Digital tip Page 120 and elsewhere Physical change simulation Remove reference Does not exist in the program reviewed. 51 2 TG: Matter, 5B, 4th bullet Page 124 “When fireworks are set off, heat and light are created.” “When fireworks are set off, heat and light are released and are the result of a chemical change.” Correct grammar 52 2 TG: Matter, INV 5b.10 table Page 126 Physical Changes 1) Reversible state changes (melting wax) 2) Mixing without state changes (combining salt and water) 3) Changes in shape (molding clay) 4) Changes in color (painting a wall) 5) Changes in size (grating a potato) List only changes of state of matter. Factually incorrect: NGSS definition of “physical change” in PS1.B and is that heating and cooling causes changes that may be permanent. 53 2 TG: Matter TG INV 5B, 4th bullet Page 125 “Cutting a pizza” Remove bullet Factually incorrect: cutting a is not a physical change.
57 2 TG: Matter Scenario C SIS 5C n/a Remove entire scenario Students have not yet learned about insulators and will be unable to complete task based on instruction 58 2 TG: Matter Summative Assessment 2 At end of book (no page numbers) “Brick houses cannot be destroyed.” houses can be destroyed.” Factual error 59 2 TG: Matter Summative assessment 3 (answer key) End of book (no page numbers) “3. Which of the following properties can be used to describe both a cube of water and a cube of metal? Choose all that apply. a. Hard b. Square c. Solid d. Wet” Key should include “wet” as an acceptable answer. Factual 60 2 TG: Matter Summative assessment 5 End of book (no page numbers) Theresa wants to make blue dye. Choose one of the following materials that she could use to make blue dye. Blue chalk Blueberries Ocean water Blue thread remove Not tied to instruction.
64 2 TG: Materials SIM Weathering No page simulation (No text) There is no difference between weathering by wind vs. water Factually incorrect 65 2 TG: Earth Materials Page 164 “They noticed about the slope of hill” “They noticed about the slope of the hill” Grammatical error 66 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity, Lesson 1A Page 37 “Food is abiotic.” “Food is a biotic factor.” Factual error 67 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity Page 57 “Isopods are insects.” “Isopods are crustaceans.” Factual error 68 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity Page 116 “Humans planting flowers… more plants for animals to eat.” Remove or change this response. Factual error 69 2 TG: Ecosystem Diversity Summative Assessment #10 “Ken studies insects all over the world. He finds a greater diversity of insects in the rainforest than in the tundra. Why might this be?” Insects might need more regular water as well as moderate temperature – remove item or fix answer. Factual 70 3 TG: Forces and Interactions Page 96, item 5, second bullet “Distance from the paperclip is attracted to the two magnets increases when the magnetic force increases.” “Distance from which the paperclip is attracted to the two magnets decreases when the magnetic force increases.” Factual 71 3 TG: Forces and Interactions, INV 4A Pages 112- 117 “Make sure the north end of the magnet…” delete Factual error: It does not matter which end of the magnet is used (as evidenced by their image of a bar magnet with iron filings).
72 3 TG: Forces and Interactions 4B.7 5th bullet Page 119 “Iron filings are not magnets.” “Iron filings are magnets.” Factual error 73 3 TG: Forces and Interaction, Lesson 4D Pages Question 1 bullet 4 “What do iron filings tell us about a magnet? (iron filings identify the north and south poles of the magnet).” Iron filings do not identify N and S of magnets – remove. Factual error: see figure A on page 120 of this TG for an image of a bar magnet with iron filings. 74 3 TG: Forces and Interactions SIS 4D. “Electric forces have poles.” “Electric forces do not have poles.” Factual error 75 3 TG: Weather and Climate Patterns, Materials List Pages 33 and 67 The Materials List Need to include global relief map, classroom barometer, and weather station to required materials. Omitted from original list 76 4 TG: Energy Lesson 2 EXT Popcorn Energy Page 62 “Beginning with the energy from the sun, review the energy transfers and conversions that occur to make popcorn (light, heat, sound).” Need to include motion of the popping kernels. Factual 77 4 TG: Energy Works Page 99 bulb” “buzzer” or “mystery box” Factual error: the mystery box is a buzzer not a light bulb. 78 4 TG: Energy Works Pages Investigation 4D (the entire investigation) remove Factual error: Aligning marbles as a Newton’s Cradle does not illustrate transfer of energy by waves.
86 5 TG: Structure and Properties of Matter Page 95 “Evaporation occurs when liquid water becomes a gas without reaching its boiling point.” “Evaporation and vaporization are the same thing when a gas or vapor is formed from a liquid.” Factual Error: after checking both the Oxford and Webster (unabridged) dictionaries and multiple chemistry textbooks, vaporization and evaporation are defined as being the same thing. There is no distinction between turning into vapor below or at the boiling point. 87 5 TG: Structure and Properties of Matter, Teaching Tip Page 96 “Buoyancy is a physical property.” Replace the word “buoyancy” with “density.” Factual Buoyancy is not a physical property, density is. 88 5 TG: Structure and Properties of Matter Page 97 “Heavier objects are harder and tend to sink while lighter objects are softer and tend to float. Also, magnetic items tend to be made of metal.” delete Factual error 89 5 TG: Structure and Properties of Matter, Digital Tip Page 99 “Explain that milk and water have similar dense and will mix.” delete Grammatical error/typo AND factual error – by this definition, sand and corn syrup should mix to form a solution.
92 5 TG: Structure and Properties of Matter, 5A Pages (See comments for item numbers 46, 47, 48, 53, and 55 for grade 2 about what a physical change is. The same examples are used here incorrectly.) -Page 148 (lesson overview): “The lesson guides students in identifying the evidence of a physical change when matter is manipulated or mixed.” - Page 148 (Objective 2): “Provide evidence that mixing substances results in a physical or chemical change.” -Investigation A, numbers 1-4 (regarding physical changes that are not physical changes), etc. delete Factual error- NGSS definition of “physical change” in PS1.B and is that heating and cooling causes changes that may be permanent. 93 5 TG: Structure and Properties of Matter, LA 5B “Popping corn is a physical change.” Popping corn is a chemical change, so delete article. Factual error, or replace the article 94 5 LR: Matter and Energy ln Ecosystems Page 3 Molecule Needs definition Omission – term has not been defined before.
95 5 TG: Matter and Energy in Ecosystems Page 61 “Producers have the most energy because they obtain it directly from the sun.” “Producers do NOT have the most energy because they obtain it directly from the sun.” Factual error Social Content Citations: The panel identified the following social content violations: # SC Code Grade Level Component Page Number(s) Current Text Proposed Corrected Text Reason for Citation 1 L1 1 TG: Sky Watchers 110 “Oreo Moon Phases” “Chocolate sandwich cookie moon phases” “Oreo” is a trademark name. 2 L1 4 TG: Changing Earth 69 “Velcro” Substitute with generic hook and loop. “Velcro” is a trademark name. 3 L1/L2 4 TG: Energy Works 55 “Ping Pong” Table tennis product. “Ping Pong” is a trademark name. California Department of Education, August 2018