THESIS: Option B on the Back Option B Directions: Rewrite the HOOK in the introduction above to make it better. Use the sensory language graphic organizer to help you make it better. If for a section you cannot come up with anything, skip it. See: Use your words to help me see the topic AT LEAST 3 EXAMPLES Hear: Use your words to help me hear the topic Taste: Use your words to help me taste the topic Touch: Use your words to help me touch your topic Smell: Use your words to help me smell your topic Example Jumping 5 feet in the air Example The audience is screaming for the win Example Taste the buttery popcorn Example Feeling the rubber of the basketball Example Smelling the jalapeno and cheese flavored hot dogs Using what you wrote in the sensory language graphic organizer, rewrite the hook in the introduction found on pg 1 below.
Clarity -Your ideas need to be clearly expressed so that the reader (me) can understand you. -Your ideas are organized in a way that makes sense. One idea does not randomly go into the next. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Revise the Introduction Above Evaluate an Introduction (With Peer) Have you ever come home from a hot tiring day of school and don’t feel like doing homework Well now you don’t have to with Ro-Bert the robot that does anything you want is a fun 4 foot robot that does everything you want Ro-co influences tweens to buy Ro-Bert by meeting tweens desire for freedom., fun, and power Introduction Rubric Criteria 10 8 7 6 0 Hook -You have an engaging hook that uses vivid sensory language. -You have engaged my senses in at least 2 of the following ways: see, hear, taste, touch, or smell. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Background Knowledge -You give background knowledge the reader needs in order to understand the topic that will be argued about in the essay. -Don’t blend the hook and the background knowledge together. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Thesis -Your thesis is clear. -The thesis answers the essay question. -It contains your argument/position on the topic and 3 points to support your argument/position. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Clarity -Your ideas need to be clearly expressed so that the reader (me) can understand you. You have met of You have met of the criteria. You have met of You have not met the criteria.
-Your ideas are organized in a way that makes sense. One idea does not randomly go into the next. the criteria. the criteria. Revise the Introduction Above Evaluate an Introduction Review 1 (By Yourself) Having nice fresh shiny glasses are fun. Visionz are super cool glasses that do super cool things. Vizionz influences tweens to buy Visionz by meeting their desire for power, fun, and belonging. Introduction Rubric Criteria 10 8 7 6 0 Hook -You have an engaging hook that uses vivid sensory language. -You have engaged my senses in at least 2 of the following ways: see, hear, taste, touch, or smell. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Background Knowledge -You give background knowledge the reader needs in order to understand the topic that will be argued about in the essay. -Don’t blend the hook and the background knowledge together. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Thesis -Your thesis is clear. -The thesis answers the essay question. -It contains your argument/position on the topic and 3 points to support your argument/position. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Clarity -Your ideas need to be clearly expressed so that the reader (me) can understand you. You have met of You have met of the criteria. You have met of You have not met the criteria.
-Your ideas are organized in a way that makes sense. One idea does not randomly go into the next. the criteria. the criteria. TOTAL: /40 Revise the Introduction from Above Evaluate an Introduction Review 2 (By Yourself) Instead of buying new shoes and going back to the store you should buy “the Kicks.” It’s a shoe box that can clean and design your shoes. A machine that can edit your shoes is called “The Kicks.” It makes your shoes new. “The Kicks” has a speaker, change smell button, shoe design. Introduction Rubric Criteria 10 8 7 6 0 Hook -You have an engaging hook that uses vivid sensory language. -You have engaged my senses in at least 2 of the following ways: see, hear, taste, touch, or smell. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Background Knowledge -You give background knowledge the reader needs in order to understand the topic that will be argued about in the essay. -Don’t blend the hook and the background knowledge together. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Thesis -Your thesis is clear. -The thesis answers the essay question. -It contains your argument/position on the topic and 3 points to support your argument/position. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Clarity -Your ideas need to be clearly expressed so that the reader (me) can understand you. You have met of You have met of the criteria. You have met of You have not met the criteria.
Clarity -Your ideas need to be clearly expressed so that the reader (me) can understand you. -Your ideas are organized in a way that makes sense. One idea does not randomly go into the next. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. TOTAL: /40 Revise the Introduction from Above Evaluate and Revise Your Introduction Based on the Rubric Introduction Rubric Criteria 10 8 7 6 0 Hook -You have an engaging hook that uses vivid sensory language. -You have engaged my senses in at least 2 of the following ways: see, hear, taste, touch, or smell. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Background Knowledge -You give background knowledge the reader needs in order to understand the topic that will be argued about in the essay. -Don’t blend the hook and the background knowledge together. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Thesis -Your thesis is clear. -The thesis answers the essay question. -It contains your argument/position on the topic and 3 points to support your argument/position. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria. Clarity -Your ideas need to be clearly expressed so that the reader (me) can understand you. -Your ideas are organized in a way that makes sense. One idea You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have met of the criteria. You have not met the criteria.
that was ever created. When you could pick any game that makes you feel powerful. Game Buffet meets tweens’ need for power, so they buy Game buffet. 10 8 7 6 0 TOPIC SENTENCE It contains the beginning part of your thesis + 1 point to support your thesis 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met INTRODUCE EVIDENCE -You state the author and the title of the text you will be quoting from. -You summarize what the quote will say and then you use a colon 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EVIDENCE -You quote one piece of evidence that supports your topic sentence -You quote using the following format: “words words words” (121). 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EXPLAIN -You clearly and thoroughly explain how the evidence supports the point you made in your topic sentence. 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met CONCLUDE Restate the topic sentence in a new way (keep in mind the evidence you have to support the topic sentence) 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met Revise the Body Paragraph From Above Evaluate Body Paragraph 1 (With Peer) Note: U Watch= a watch that has features to make your life full of education and fun
Jordan Nunx, the author of Watch Weekly, contends that U Watch Inc. You get to choose what you want to put and do on it. It gives yo0u the power to choose by yourself. Choosing whatever you want makes you feel powerful. 10 8 7 6 0 TOPIC SENTENCE It contains the beginning part of your thesis + 1 point to support your thesis 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met INTRODUCE EVIDENCE -You state the author and the title of the text you will be quoting from. -You summarize what the quote will say and then you use a colon 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EVIDENCE -You quote one piece of evidence that supports your topic sentence -You quote using the following format: “words words words” (121). 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EXPLAIN -You clearly and thoroughly explain how the evidence supports the point you made in your topic sentence. 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met CONCLUDE Restate the topic sentence in a new way (keep in mind the evidence you have to support the topic sentence) 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met Revise the Body Paragraph From Above Evaluate Body Paragraph 1 Review HW 1 Note: Henna Venna= a pen that you can use to give yourself non-permanent tatoos
Sally Summer, the author of amazing Products, states that Henna Venna. “You can do your own design and whatever color you want” (40) this piece of evidence support the point I made in my topic sentence because it explains why it is powerful. Tween love buying Henna Venna because the product is powerful and tweens love to be powerful. 10 8 7 6 0 TOPIC SENTENCE It contains the beginning part of your thesis + 1 point to support your thesis 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met INTRODUCE EVIDENCE -You state the author and the title of the text you will be quoting from. -You summarize what the quote will say and then you use a colon 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EVIDENCE -You quote one piece of evidence that supports your topic sentence -You quote using the following format: “words words words” (121). 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EXPLAIN -You clearly and thoroughly explain how the evidence supports the point you made in your topic sentence. 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met CONCLUDE Restate the topic sentence in a new way (keep in mind the evidence you have to support the topic sentence) 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met Revise the Body Paragraph From Above Evaluate Body Paragraph 1 Review HW 3 Vizionz=they are glasses that can do anything; they have built in ear buds and a cell phone inside
Note: Radical Hair Dye= hair dye that smells like whatever you want and you can change the color and style of your hair with the push of a button Radical Hair Dye influences tweens to buy Rad Dye meeting tweens desire for belonging. Rad Dye is powerful because you get a free unicorn. Rad Dye give you power because you get a free unicorn and having a free unicorn gives. 10 8 7 6 0 TOPIC SENTENCE It contains the beginning part of your thesis + 1 point to support your thesis 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met INTRODUCE EVIDENCE -You state the author and the title of the text you will be quoting from. -You summarize what the quote will say and then you use a colon 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EVIDENCE -You quote one piece of evidence that supports your topic sentence -You quote using the following format: “words words words” (121). 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EXPLAIN -You clearly and thoroughly explain how the evidence supports the point you made in your topic sentence. 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met CONCLUDE Restate the topic sentence in a new way (keep in mind the evidence you have to support the topic sentence) 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met Revise the Body Paragraph From Above Evaluate Body Paragraph 1 Review HW 5 M.T.F.= a multi-tasking fan for tweens and their busy lives
Body Paragraph 1 Rubric 10 8 7 6 0 TOPIC SENTENCE It contains the beginning part of your thesis + 1 point to support your thesis 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met INTRODUCE EVIDENCE -You state the author and the title of the text you will be quoting from. -You summarize what the quote will say and then you use a colon 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EVIDENCE -You quote one piece of evidence that supports your topic sentence -You quote using the following format: “words words words” (121). 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met EXPLAIN -You clearly and thoroughly explain how the evidence supports the point you made in your topic sentence. 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met CONCLUDE Restate the topic sentence in a new way (keep in mind the evidence you have to support the topic sentence) 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met Total: /50 TRANSITION WORDS Transition words help your ideas flow logically.
Body Paragraph Rubric (Either Body Paragraph 2 or 3 Will Be Graded Based on the Below Rubric) 10 8 7 6 0 TOPIC SENTENCE It contains the beginning part of your thesis + 1 point to support your thesis 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met INTRODUCE EVIDENCE -You state the author and the title of the text you will be quoting from. -You summarize what the quote will say and then you use a colon 89-80% of the criteria met 79-70% of the criteria met 69-60% of the criteria met Criteria not met
-You establish and maintain a formal style. -Use of the words “I, me, and my” are not present in the essay. -Stay away from contractions (examples: can’t, won’t, shouldn’t) -You do not use text language (examples: lol, cuz) Transition Words -You have correctly used one of the following transition words to connect similar ideas: moreover, furthermore, and in addition. NA NA NA Criteria not met TOTAL: /60