Writing prompt: Evacuation Drill

Student essay:
Dear students
I am in honour of standing to make a speech there
As we all know ,safety is important for everyone .Our school hold the evacuation drill every year so that we could master the knowledge and skill that we can use to solve the urgent problems.However,some students do not take it seriously.For example,some syudents escape from the spot laughing ang talking .And some students eating while they are running. There are some suggestions for us students when we take part in the evacuation drill.
To start with, we should keep clam and quiet,follow teachers direction.What's more we are supposed ti learn to protect not only ourselves but also the people around ud.
That's all what I want to say . Thanks for your listenning.
Yours sincsrely
Li Hua

Corrected essay:
Dear students,
I am honoured to stand here to make a speech.
As we all know, safety is important for everyone. Our school holds the evacuation drill every year so that we can master the knowledge and skill that we can use to solve the urgent problems. However, some students do not take it seriously. For example, some students escape from the spot, laughing and talking. And some students are eating while they are running. There are some suggestions for us students when we take part in the evacuation drill.
To start with, we should keep calm and quiet and follow teachers' directions. What's more, we are supposed to learn to protect not only ourselves but also the people around us.
That's all I want to say. Thanks for your listening.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua