Writing prompt: The Story of The Amazing Spider-Man

Student essay:
He was so amazing that it was hard to forget. When I was a child, I first saw America cartoons"Spider-Man". I was deeply attracted by this super hero.
Spiderman's name is Peter Parker. He lost his parents when he was very young and lived with his aunt and uncle. Peter had a normal school life. But because of a chance, his life became interesting.
On his journey with his classmates, he got bit by a spider. When he got up,he found that he didn't need glasses anymore,he can jump high,climb the walls and so on. He became very angry when he found out that his uncle was killed by the robber. He caught the robber by his ability. After then,he remembered his uncle had said,'the more power you have,the more responsibility you should take.' He did it so and became a guardian of the city.
Spider-Man's most important battle has been within himself: the struggle between the ordinary obligations of Peter Parker and the extraordinary responsibilities of Spider-Man. With the emergence of Electro, Peter must confront a foe far more powerful than he. And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returns, Peter comes to realize that all of his enemies have one thing in common.

Corrected essay:
He was so amazing that it was hard to forget. When I was a child, I first saw the American cartoon "Spider-Man". I was deeply attracted by this superhero.
Spider-Man's name is Peter Parker. He lost his parents when he was very young and lived with his aunt and uncle. Peter had a normal school life. But because of a chance, his life became interesting.
On his journey with his classmates, he got bitten by a spider. When he got up, he found that he didn't need glasses anymore, and he could jump high, climb walls, and so on. He became very angry when he found out that his uncle was killed by a robber. He caught the robber with his ability. After that, he remembered his uncle had said, "The more power you have, the more responsibility you should take." He did so and became a guardian of the city.
Spider-Man's most important battle has been within himself: the struggle between the ordinary obligations of Peter Parker and the extraordinary responsibilities of Spider-Man. With the emergence of Electro, Peter had to confront a foe far more powerful than he. And as his old friend, Harry Osborn, returned, Peter came to realize that all of his enemies had one thing in common.