Writing prompt: Madam C. J. Walker

Student essay:
Madam C. J. Walker was a girl who always losing hair. She fell so sad that she tried many medicines. However,none was useful.
One evening she dreamed there is a man who showed her some plants which could let her don't lose hair any more. When she got up she tried the plants at once. A few days later her hair grew faster and didn't lose any more. She was very happy. Suddenly a fresh idea come into his mind,why not sell the plants to others?
A few months later she began to sell the plants as the hair products. That made her lots of money.

Corrected essay:
Madam C. J. Walker was a girl who was always losing hair. She felt so sad that she tried many medicines. However, none were useful.
One evening she dreamed there was a man who showed her some plants which could let her not lose hair anymore. When she got up she tried the plants at once. A few days later her hair grew faster and didn't fall out anymore. She was very happy. Suddenly a fresh idea came into her mind: why not sell the plants to others?
A few months later she began to sell the plants as hair products. That made her lots of money.