Writing prompt: My Dreaming Destination in Europe

Student essay:
Compared with other developed country in Europe,my dreaming destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland,with the population of 750 million,is situated in central Europe.The beautiful country covers an area of 41 thousand square kilometres.As the Swiss capital,Berne is treated as the most important city of international meetings.It also has a world-renown city called Geneva.
Over the years,the country landscape has been praised by millions of tourists,who call it "The World Garden". On the other hand,the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little,especially in the watches,chemistry and food industry.
Switzerland is a popular starting point for many excursions.It is my dreaming destination all the time.

Corrected essay:
Compared with other developed countries in Europe, my dream destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland, with a population of 7.5 million, is situated in central Europe. The beautiful country covers an area of 41 thousand square kilometres. As the Swiss capital, Berne is treated as the most important city for international meetings. It also has a world-renowned city called Geneva.
Over the years, the country's landscape has been praised by millions of tourists, who call it "The World Garden." On the other hand, the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little, especially in the watches, chemical and food industries.
Switzerland is a popular starting point for many excursions. It has always been my dreaming destination.