Writing prompt: My Hero

Student essay:
My name is X,and I come from China. And my hero is my dad,because he has many friends.
My dad is not special,but he had taught me a lot. If I quarrel with my good friends,
he will teach me how to get along well with my friends. Once I have a bad mark,he did not scold me,but to comfort me. He is kind and helpful,I can ask him question anytime. Every day, he silently pays attention to me,
he loves my hobby,and he always enjoys hobby with me at weekend. He helps me in my life and never strict with me. He can really understand me.

Corrected essay:
My name is X, and I come from China. And my hero is my dad, because he has many friends.
My dad is not special, but he has taught me a lot. If I quarrel with my good friends, he will teach me how to get along well with my friends. Once I had a bad mark, he did not scold me but comforted me. He is kind and helpful, and I can ask him questions anytime. Every day, he silently pays attention to me.
He loves my hobby, and he always enjoys the hobby with me at the weekend. He helps me in my life and is never strict with me. He can really understand me.