Writing prompt: The Different Attitudes Boarders

Student essay:
Nowdays,ninety percentage of students are only child in the home. And because of the distance from the school are very far,or many parents are very busy.So,many students live in school.Therefore,there have some different attitudes about only child live in school.
Some people are support of it.In their attitudes,they think this can solve many problems and save many times.Their children also can achieve great protection from school.Learning environment can be improved,so the child's grades can be improved too.
However, other people don't think so.They think these children loss the control of their parents,and have too much freedom.They may be become more bad and do not listen to the teacher and parents.
As far as I can see,nowdays children most are only child.When they live in home,they can not achieve great help with busy parents.But when they live in school,they have many friends ,classmates and teachers.They can ask for help to them.They also can get great control by teachers.So,it is for them to live in the school.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays, ninety percent of students are the only child in their home. And because the distance from the school is very far, or many parents are very busy, many students live in school. Therefore, there are some different attitudes about the only child living in school.
Some people support it. In their opinion, they think this can solve many problems and save much time. Their children also can achieve great protection from school. The learning environment can be improved, so the child's grades can be improved too.
However, other people don't think so. They think these children are out of the control of their parents, and have too much freedom. They may become worse and not listen to the teacher and parents.
As far as I can see, nowadays most children are the only child. When they live at home, they can not get great help from busy parents. But when they live in school, they have many friends, classmates and teachers. They can ask for help from them. They are also under great control of teachers. So, it is better for them to live in the school.