Writing prompt: To Kill or Not to Kill

Student essay:
Recently,many nations have been faced with the problem of whether death penalty is a must in our society or not ? In my viewpoints , I don't think it's an effective means of deterring crimes and it should be abolished .
There are many cruel means of capital punishment ,such as hanging ,shooting ,electrocution and lethal injection . A lot of people consider that killing criminals brings us rewards and they must have believed there were benefits in it for us . For instance, we are safer when a murderer is sentenced to death .
However,it is a tragic illusion that we can defend life by taking life .Everyone is born equal and has no rights to take away the other's life .therefore , the death penalty is the worst type of crime .
In addition, the men who are murderers mostly result from the outside nasty environment, such as financial problem , less education and lack of care of families . So , we should give them a chance to turn over a now leaf.
How can we settle this issue ? Firstly,the government should support the poor families .Secondly,the social organizations and families should show their love to each other .Thirdly,everyone should be tolerant to reconcile himself to others when he gets hurt by chance . With the efforts of all parts concerned , the death penalty will be abolish thoroughly and our life will be better.

Corrected essay:
Recently, many nations have been faced with the problem of whether the death penalty is a must in our society or not. In my viewpoint, I don't think it's an effective means of deterring crimes and it should be abolished.
There are many cruel means of capital punishment, such as hanging, shooting, electrocution and lethal injection. A lot of people consider that killing criminals brings us rewards and they must have believed there were benefits in it for us. For instance, we are safer when a murderer is sentenced to death.
However, it is a tragic illusion that we can defend life by taking life. Everyone is born equal and has no right to take away another's life. Therefore, the death penalty is the worst type of crime.
In addition, the men who are murderers mostly result from the outside nasty environment, such as financial problems, less education and lack of care from families. So, we should give them a chance to turn over a new leaf.
How can we settle this issue? Firstly, the government should support the poor families. Secondly, social organizations and families should show their love to each other. Thirdly, everyone should be tolerant and reconcile themselves to others when they get hurt by chance. With the efforts of all parts concerned, the death penalty will be abolished thoroughly and our life will be better.