Writing prompt: How Do You Study English?

Student essay:
To learn good English, i used the following ways:\nFirst to learn English well, you must know your grammar, only when you know how to use grammar, you can improve your English quickly. You can also listen to English tapes or watch Tv programs to improve your listening and also speaking.\nSecond, remember not to be shy when you speak to other people, they will not make fun of you, take a deep breath and smile when you're speaking to foreigners.\nFinally, prepare for a English notebook to write down all of the English words that you often make mistakes on.\nAll in all,if you study English hard,you can learn English well

Corrected essay:
To learn good English, I use the following ways:
First, to learn English well, you must know your grammar. Only when you know how to use grammar can you improve your English quickly. You can also listen to English tapes or watch TV programs to improve your listening and also speaking.
Second, remember not to be shy when you speak to other people. They will not make fun of you. Take a deep breath and smile when you're speaking to foreigners.
Finally, prepare an English notebook to write down all of the English words that you often make mistakes on.
All in all, if you study English hard, you can learn English well.