Writing prompt: Community Service

Student essay:
In this summer holiday,i played computer games every day. I felt happy,not the real happy. But the community service made me feel the real happy.
In a wonderful morning,i went out to do community service,helping an old people. At first,i chatted with the old man,then i did some housework and cooked for the old man. We had lunch together. We both felt happy that day. When i left,i saw the old man's face covered with a smile. At that moment,i felt real happy.
In that day,i felt real happy because i did a right thing.

Corrected essay:
In this summer holiday, I played computer games every day. I felt happy, but not really happy. However, the community service made me feel really happy.
In a wonderful morning, I went out to do community service, helping an old person. At first, I chatted with the old man, then I did some housework and cooked for the old man. We had lunch together. We both felt happy that day. When I left, I saw the old man's face covered with a smile. At that moment, I felt really happy.
In that day, I felt really happy because I did a right thing.