Writing prompt: A Dinosaur Attack

Student essay:
The dinosaur attack 08.1 Lily
Long long ago. A dinosaur name Amy. She was very big, with four long legs and a large body. As the only dinosaur in the word, she was very lonely.
One day, she came to our school. She was so excited that she was bellow loudly. She stomps her feet and the world sway. When the children saw her, they were scared and ran screaming back to their class room. They were so scared that they couldn't move.
Just then a little boy still standee here, he didn't with fear in terror the dinosaur. He wanted to make friend with the dinosaur, they played swing, seesaw happily. They were so happy. When the others children saw that, they all wanted play with the dinosaurs. Finally, they played together. Now, we didn't scared dinosaur at all. On the contrary, we all played with dinosaur.

Corrected essay:
The dinosaur attacked Lily on January 8th.
Long long ago, a dinosaur was named Amy, and she was very big, with four long legs and a large body. As the only dinosaur in the world, she was very lonely.
One day, she came to our school. She was so excited that she bellowed loudly. She stomped her feet and the world swayed. When the children saw her, they were scared and ran screaming back to their classroom. They were so scared that they couldn't move.
Just then, a little boy still stood there, and he didn't feel fear and terror from the dinosaur. He wanted to make friends with the dinosaur, and they played swing and seesaw happily. They were so happy. When the other children saw that, they all wanted to play with the dinosaur. Finally, they played together. Now, we aren't scared of the dinosaur at all. On the contrary, we all played with the dinosaur.