Writing prompt: My Room

Student essay:
I am Gina. I am very tidy. Look,the book is in my bookcase. My pens are in the pencil box,and my pencil box is in the desk. My eraser and my dictionaries are in my table. This is my room.

Corrected essay:
I am Gina. I am very tidy. Look, the book is in my bookcase. My pens are in the pencil box, and my pencil box is in the desk. My eraser and my dictionaries are on my table. This is my room.