Writing prompt: An Introduction to No 4 Middle School of Zunyi County

Student essay:
Dear Mary,
I'm glad to know that you're going to our school. I'd like to give you a brief introduction to it.
Four Meddle School, the smallest meddles school in our town. It's in the west of Nanbai. And it lies in the west of the Xiangshan and a lot of mountains and few houses surrounding its south, east and southeast. And a pool lies on the southwest of Four Meddle School. It's beautiful!
Our school covers an area of about 60 square kilometres and has student less than 3,000. It's famous for many bad things in Nanbai, and it is terrible for students' live environment. But the scenery is so beautiful and the climate is so pleasant. You will surprise when you saw those faraway mountains on the education building.
I'm sure you'll have a good time there and love the scenery. Yours,
K

Corrected essay:
Dear Mary,
I'm glad to know that you're going to our school. I'd like to give you a brief introduction to it.
The Fourth Middle School, the smallest middle school in our town, is in the west of Nanbai. And it lies to the west of Xiangshan, with a lot of mountains and few houses surrounding its south, east, and southeast. And a pool lies to the southwest of Fourth Middle School. It's beautiful!
Our school covers an area of about 60 square kilometres and has fewer than 3,000 students. It's famous for many bad things in Nanbai, and it is terrible for students' living environment. But the scenery is so beautiful and the climate is so pleasant. You will be surprised when you see those faraway mountains from the education building.
I'm sure you'll have a good time there and love the scenery.
Yours,
K