Writing prompt: My First Day at High School

Student essay:
Monday, Sept.3
Today was the first day of my new life. I looked at my new books and checked everything for the new school year. I was excited as well as worried.
What made me excited was the school I would study in is my dream school, it has many good teachers and the environment of the school is good as well. But I was not sure if I would get on well with my classmates. When I got to school, I was glad to find that all my teachers and classmates were friendly. That made me was not nervous any more and made me feel free and comfortable. When I left school, I thought I wouldn't be worried any longer. What's more, now I believe I'll have a good time together with my classmates. It is really a wonderful day!

Corrected essay:
Monday, Sept. 3
Today was the first day of my new life. I looked at my new books and checked everything for the new school year. I was excited as well as worried.
What made me excited was the school I would study in was my dream school. It has many good teachers and the environment of the school is good as well. But I was not sure if I would get on well with my classmates. When I got to school, I was glad to find that all my teachers and classmates were friendly. That made me not nervous any more and made me feel free and comfortable. When I left school, I thought I wouldn't be worried any longer. What's more, now I believe I'll have a good time together with my classmates. It was really a wonderful day!