Writing prompt: My Best Friend and I

Student essay:
My name is S.I think friends are like books-I doesn't need a lot of them,as long as they are good.Lucy is my best friend.We have many differences.I have long straight hair but Lucy is a beautiful girl with short curly hair.I like sport so I play them better than Lucy.She is much more hard-working than me.I am a little quiet.She is more outgoing and funnier than anyone I know.She always tells some interesting jokes and makes us laugh a lot.Both of us like doing some reading.We always go to the library on weekends together.

Corrected essay:
My name is S. I think friends are like books—I don't need a lot of them, as long as they are good. Lucy is my best friend. We have many differences. I have long straight hair but Lucy is a beautiful girl with short curly hair. I like sports so I play them better than Lucy. She is much more hard-working than me. I am a little quiet. She is more outgoing and funnier than anyone I know. She always tells some interesting jokes and makes us laugh a lot. Both of us like doing some reading. We always go to the library on weekends together.