Writing prompt: My Best Friend

Student essay:
Sometimes how to make friends is not an easy task for friends. As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying'give you money to show our close friendship'.
In my opinion, this behaviour has advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, this behaviour enable student to focus on friendship, on the other hand, this behaviour can inform bad environment and make students think money is everything.
Therefore, as a student,l should how to make friends. Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, support your now and encourages you future. Taking care about your friendship by your heart, rather than money. Secondly, money is not represent your value friendship. You can dly some small presents to your friend, it is good for your friendship.
In the current society, a true friend is very important for you. Thus,you should treasure friend.

Corrected essay:
Sometimes how to make friends is not an easy task for friends. As is vividly described in the picture, a boy pays 100 yuan for making friends with a girl, saying, "Give you money to show our close friendship."
In my opinion, this behaviour has advantages and disadvantages. On the one hand, this behaviour enables students to focus on friendship. On the other hand, this behaviour can form a bad environment and make students think money is everything.
Therefore, as a student, I should learn how to make friends. Firstly, a true friend is someone who accepts your past, supports your present and encourages your future. Take care of your friendship with your heart, rather than money. Secondly, money does not represent your valuable friendship. You can bring some small presents to your friend, and it is good for your friendship.
In the current society, a true friend is very important for you. Thus, you should treasure friends.