Writing prompt: Giving Advice

Student essay:
Dear Wang Li:
Nice to meet you Wang Li.Learning English is a good way to improve your culture level.Let me give you some advice.
Remembering new words isn't a easy thing.It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebooks or other place you may see it everyday. I suggest you read them aloud and use them as much as possible.
I believe,if you remember them by heart and do it just like i tell you.You will be success.
From,
Mr.Knowall

Corrected essay:
Dear Wang Li,
Nice to meet you, Wang Li. Learning English is a good way to improve your cultural level. Let me give you some advice.
Remembering new words isn't an easy thing. It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebook or another place you may see every day. I suggest you read them aloud and use them as much as possible.
I believe if you remember them by heart and do it just like I tell you, you will be successful.
From,
Mr. Knowall