Writing prompt: Write to China Daily

Student essay:
There are some problems of the environment.One of them is that the number of the population is increading.And now people is endlessly overdeveloping Earth's resources through agriculture, fishing, hunting and tourism,and that is a serious problem,too.Of course,the water resource is also a problem which we need to care about.Cutting trees too more will make the earth hotter,so it is a problem.In addition,the air pollution is a problem we can see every day.
If we want to remove these problems,we should do these things.First,we should hold back that people cut trees too more.And we had better control population growth.
Finally I hope the environment will be better in the future.

Corrected essay:
There are some problems of the environment. One of them is that the number of the population is increasing. And now people are endlessly overdeveloping Earth's resources through agriculture, fishing, hunting and tourism, and that is a serious problem, too. Of course, the water resource is also a problem which we need to care about. Cutting too many trees will make the Earth hotter, so it is a problem. In addition, air pollution is a problem we can see every day.
If we want to remove these problems, we should do these things. First, we should hold back people from cutting too many trees. And we had better control population growth.
Finally, I hope the environment will be better in the future.