Writing prompt: School Studying Is More Important

Student essay:
As all of us have known,details aren't only the easiest things that we may ignore,but also the most pivotal ones in our daily life.
Some people may think that it mikes no difference to their life if they think little of being more careful about details. If you think so,stop it! Throw it away now because it's totally wrong!
Didn't you have a case where you should have to get a wonderful grade in the final exam but you found that you did not even pass the exam in the end just because you get the wrong number of the answer? I bet you did and you must be very upset then.
But have you thought about why? How could you be defeated by your negligence? The answer is that you pay almost no attention to details! If you had checked up your answers before handed them in,you will get the grade you should get! So you see,how details influence our study! As the famous saying goes:Details determine success or failure.

Corrected essay:
As all of us have known, details aren't only the easiest things that we may ignore, but also the most pivotal ones in our daily life.
Some people may think that it makes no difference to their life if they think little of being more careful about details. If you think so, stop it! Throw it away now because it's totally wrong!
Didn't you have a situation where you should have gotten a wonderful grade in the final exam but you found that you did not even pass the exam in the end just because you mistook the number of the answers? I bet you did and you must have been very upset then.
But have you thought about why? How could you be defeated by your negligence? The answer is that you pay almost no attention to details! If you had checked your answers before handing them in, you would have gotten the grade you should get! So you see, how details influence our study! As the famous saying goes, details determine success or failure.