Writing prompt: Actions Speak Louder than Words

Student essay:
As the saying goes, Actions speak louder than words.I consider it is true enough for us to trust.
It's known to us , term begins, our class teacher always let us write a composition which is about your expectation and your plan in new term. We usually write something which is so stodgy that no one may affirm at all.Such as :I would make every effort to do everything superior to before. However,almost nobody can observe.Moreover, if you just talk without your specific actions, you will become the boastful to people.
In conclusion, words is nothing but words. Actions is the only way to make people admire you. Do not talk much, just act,in that actions speak louder than words.

Corrected essay:
As the saying goes, actions speak louder than words. I consider it true enough for us to trust.
It's known to us that when a term begins, our class teacher always lets us write a composition which is about our expectations and our plans in the new term. We usually write something which is so stodgy that no one may affirm it at all, such as: I would make every effort to do everything better than before. However, almost nobody can observe this. Moreover, if you just talk without your specific actions, you will appear boastful to people.
In conclusion, words are nothing but words. Actions are the only way to make people admire you. Do not talk much, just act, in that actions speak louder than words.