Writing prompt: The Reason Why We Choose to Listen Music

Student essay:
Today mang people like to listen to the music. I like to listening music too.We listen to the music when we sleepping,or doing other things.
Why we like listen to the music so much.When I listening to the music,I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world while listen the music .So I think listen to the music can make we feel relaxing.It's good for our healthy.So,this is one of the reason we like listen to the music so much.
Some people think listening to the music can also let us feel exciting and give we much energy.
Listening to the music It's good for us.

Corrected essay:
Today many people like to listen to music. I like to listen to music too. We listen to music when we are sleeping or doing other things.
Why do we like to listen to music so much? When I listen to music, I feel as if I'm going into another colorful world. So I think listening to music can make us feel relaxed. It's good for our health. So, this is one of the reasons we like to listen to music so much.
Some people think listening to music can also let us feel excited and give us much energy.
Listening to music is good for us.