Writing prompt: Application to Volunteer Association

Student essay:
My name is H. I want to join and become a member of your team. I want to go to the children's hospital to do some voluntary action. I like reading books and telling stories. The children in the hospital all suffer from serious illnesses. I want to help them. I hope they can feel better with my help. I will teach them to tell stories. This helps them express their feelings. And I will teach them to sing because music can bring them joy and peace. I will try my best to help them and make them happy. I think voluntary work is very meaningful and helpful.

Corrected essay:
My name is H. I want to join and become a member of your team. I want to go to the children's hospital to do some voluntary work. I like reading books and telling stories. The children in the hospital all suffer from serious illnesses. I want to help them. I hope they can feel better with my help. I will teach them to tell stories. This helps them express their feelings. And I will teach them to sing because music can bring them joy and peace. I will try my best to help them and make them happy. I think voluntary work is very meaningful and helpful.