Writing prompt: My Favorite Place at School

Student essay:
There are a lot of interesting places in our school,for instance classrooms, reading room and playground... Nonetheless what my favorite place is playground, because that our playground is very big and bright.
In the playground around by green trees, lawn and a rockery. I can always hear the laughter of the students when the students are playing on the playground.
Doing exercises and major festivals are held in the playground. At the end of the class,students can not only run and jump but also on the playground with a variety of machinery to do sports. When I feel tired and unhappy,I am long to walk along the playground, and then I will slowly forget troubles,and exercise can make me feel relaxed and happy here.
Although our playground is small but I still love it,because playground brings me and others laugh. It is too hard to forget this place, because in the course of school time the playground has many memories of me. In my perspective,my favorite place in school is the playground.

Corrected essay:
There are a lot of interesting places in our school, for instance, classrooms, the reading room and the playground. Nonetheless, my favorite place is the playground, because our playground is very big and bright.
The playground is surrounded by green trees, a lawn and a rockery. I can always hear the laughter of the students when the students are playing on the playground.
Exercises and major festivals are held in the playground. At the end of the class, students can not only run and jump but also use a variety of machinery to do sports on the playground. When I feel tired and unhappy, I long to walk along the playground, and then I will slowly forget my troubles, and exercise can make me feel relaxed and happy here.
Although our playground is small, I still love it, because the playground brings me and others laughter. It is too hard to forget this place, because during school time, the playground holds many of my memories. In my perspective, my favorite place in school is the playground.