Writing prompt: My Hero

Student essay:
My hero is Liu Xiang,he is a track and field player. He broke the world record 13 years. Liu xiang is China's national in the history of the first hat-trick of track and field player.
Liu Xiang started training,he was encouraged at first to train for the high jump. In2001,Liu Xiang won his first international 100m hurdles race in Japan. In 2004,he won the first Olympic gold medal for China in the 110m hurdles race.
Liu Xiang is still a symbol of courage and success,and we continue to take gret pride in him. So I must learned him. Liu xiang aroused my enthusiasm

Corrected essay:
My hero is Liu Xiang. He is a track and field player. He broke the world record 13 years ago. Liu Xiang is China's first track and field player in history to achieve a hat-trick. Liu Xiang started training when he was encouraged at first to train for the high jump. In 2001, Liu Xiang won his first international 110m hurdles race in Japan. In 2004, he won the first Olympic gold medal for China in the 110m hurdles race. Liu Xiang is still a symbol of courage and success, and we continue to take great pride in him. So I must learn from him. Liu Xiang aroused my enthusiasm.