Writing prompt: My Life in the Future

Student essay:
In twenty years, I will be thirty five years old. I will be a successful and happy person.
I will be a writer then and write many interesting stories for children because I will love to see the smile on children's face when they are reading wonderful stories which are written by me. Besides, I would like to work from home rather than work in an office because it's more comfortable.
I will live in Beijing with my family. Because Beijing is the capital of China and it has the most convenient traffic and the highest technology. On the other hand, Beijing is my hometown so I feel freely and relaxed there.
In my spare time, I will still go to school to develop skills and travel around. I will often do sports to keep healthy.
I will enjoy my life because life will be exciting in the future.

Corrected essay:
In twenty years, I will be thirty-five years old. I will be a successful and happy person.
I will be a writer then and write many interesting stories for children because I love to see the smile on children's faces when they are reading wonderful stories which are written by me. Besides, I would like to work from home rather than work in an office because it's more comfortable.
I will live in Beijing with my family, because Beijing is the capital of China and it has the most convenient traffic and the highest-level technology. On the other hand, Beijing is my hometown, so I feel free and relaxed there.
In my spare time, I will still go to school to develop skills and travel around. I will often do sports to keep healthy.
I will enjoy my life because life will be exciting in the future.