Writing prompt: The Voice of China

Student essay:
Recently,a reality talent show called the Voice of China has received a lot of praises and encouragement.It's a fact that this show made a great success in this field.
The judges sit on a chair which can turn round with pushing the red botton on its arm.So this can guarantee that the judges wont't see the apperance of the singers until they turn round the chair,which means they appreciate him and want him to join their teams.That's the reason why it is so creative that almost everyone enjoys it.
The moment more than one judeg turn round,the initiative comes to the singer.The singer can choose one of the judges who are interested in him. That means the singer is succeed.
In my opinion,the highlight of the talent show is the right which is owned by not only the judges but also the singers.Obviously,it's true and fair.The apperance won't disturb the choice of judges.They just depend on the voice to estimate the singers. So it is called the Voice of China.

Corrected essay:
Recently, a reality talent show called the Voice of China has received a lot of praise and encouragement. It's a fact that this show has made a great success in this field.
The judges sit on a chair which can turn around by pushing the red button on its arm. So this can guarantee that the judges won't see the appearance of the singers until they turn around the chair, which means they appreciate them and want them to join their teams. That's the reason why it is so creative that almost everyone enjoys it.
The moment more than one judge turns around, the initiative comes to the singer. The singer can choose one of the judges who are interested in him. That means the singer is successful.
In my opinion, the highlight of the talent show is the right which is owned by not only the judges but also the singers. Obviously, it's true and fair. The appearance won't disturb the choice of judges. They just depend on the voice to estimate the singers. So it is called the Voice of China.