Writing prompt: The Advantages and Disadvantages of Private Cars

Student essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying cars.As we all know,cars have been playing an important role in our daily life.But everything has its two sides and it is not an expection.It has a good many advantages and some disadvantages
First of all,it's undeniable that the cars provide a convenient way of transport for people.The time is reduced, we can do more things and go a farther place.On the contrary,other people have different views.They render the following opinions.As the growing of private cars,the air pollution index is increasing.Beyond the shadow of a doubt,it's the most threatening thing.
Personally,I believe the technology which is able to solve this problem will be appeared in the future.What we can do is that reducing the times as much as possible we go out by car. To protect the enviroment is to love ourselves.

Corrected essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying cars. As we all know, cars have been playing an important role in our daily life. But everything has its two sides and it is not an exception. It has a good many advantages and some disadvantages.
First of all, it's undeniable that cars provide a convenient way of transport for people. The time is reduced. We can do more things and go to a farther place. On the contrary, other people have different views. They render the following opinions. As the number of private cars grows, the air pollution index is increasing. Beyond the shadow of a doubt, it's the most threatening thing.
Personally, I believe the technology which is able to solve this problem will appear in the future. What we can do is reduce the number of times we go out by car as much as possible. To protect the environment is to love ourselves.