Writing prompt: The Way to Keep Health

Student essay:
Nowadays everyone put more and more attention to which is their own health in daily life. As students, we are important to get across to more things that are about how to keep fit. We can enrich our knowledge by this way. Firstly, we should not be crazy about less food which is rich in fat and sugar. Because in most of our time we sit, if we do as this, we will become fat easily. As we all know that sugar can make our fellings become slow. So we should enjoy tasting a variety of vegetables and fruits' delicious every day. There was a proverb saying that you are what you ate. If you want to be thin and healthy, keep doing like this. Secondly, we should take good use of exercise every day to make us go fine, not only sports can be done in P. E. class. By this way, we will be in a balanced diet which is the most people expected. We can invigorate health effectively as the same time. Last but not least, we should embrace correct habits. For example, we should go to sleep early and get awake early. This way gives the spirt of happy study to us.
So we can focus on our work which is enjoying being lost in lessons by heart. We are the flowers of our state, so we are able to become strong. So let us make a healthy life for ourselves.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays everyone pays more and more attention to their own health in daily life. As students, it is important for us to learn more things that are about how to keep fit. We can enrich our knowledge by this way. Firstly, we should not be crazy about eating food which is rich in fat and sugar. Because most of the time we sit, if we do this, we will become fat easily. As we all know, sugar can make our feelings become slow. So we should enjoy tasting a variety of delicious vegetables and fruits every day. There is a proverb saying that you are what you eat. If you want to be thin and healthy, keep doing this. Secondly, we should make good use of exercise every day to make us stay healthy. Not only sports can be done in P.E. class. By this way, we will have a balanced diet which most people expect. We can invigorate our health effectively at the same time. Last but not least, we should embrace correct habits. For example, we should go to sleep early and wake up early. This way gives the spirit of happy study to us. So we can focus on our work and enjoy getting lost in lessons. We are the flowers of our state, so we should become strong. So let us make a healthy life for ourselves.