Writing prompt: My Life in the Future

Student essay:
My hometown is Chengdu. Our future is depending on us. I should think about my life in the future. I want to be a doctor in the future. Because I can help many unabled.My parents will be proud of this. People's death is depending on me. I want to buy a house in Chengdu, because it's convenient. I can watch many beautiful views. I will find a boyfriend who lives in Chengdu, and his parents are along with. And now, I'm a senior high school's student. Nevertheless my grade is very bad. I hope I can become work hard in the future, and it's very helpful for me. When I was 24, I must be alone. It makes me brave!

Corrected essay:
My hometown is Chengdu. Our future is depending on us. I should think about my life in the future. I want to be a doctor in the future. Because I can help many disabled people. My parents will be proud of this. People's death is depending on me. I want to buy a house in Chengdu, because it's convenient. I can watch many beautiful views. I will find a boyfriend who lives in Chengdu, and his parents are along with him. And now, I'm a senior high school student. Nevertheless my grades are very bad. I hope I can become hard-working in the future, and it will be very helpful for me. When I am 24, I must be alone. It will make me brave!