Writing prompt: Ban Smoking in Public Places

Student essay:
Chinese government decide to ban to smoking in the public places on Jan. 1st, 2011 in China. Their target is no smoking in the public places by sticking bills. About 3.5 billions persons smoking in China while 75% are men others are women. What's more, about 5.4 billions people are influenced by the second-hand smoking. In addition to it, more than 100 millions persons die from the second-hand smoking a year.

Corrected essay:
The Chinese government decided to ban smoking in public places on Jan. 1st, 2011 in China. Their target is no smoking in public places by sticking up bills. About 350 million people smoke in China, 75% of whom are men and 25% are women. What's more, about 540 million people are influenced by second-hand smoke. In addition to it, more than 100 million people die from second-hand smoke a year.