Writing prompt: School Safe

Student essay:
I think it is important for us to keep safe at school. Because there are many people at school, and how to keep person safe?
First we shouldn't fight with other people and we should get on well with others.
Second we should pay attention to other people, because sometimes you keep careful but someone doesn't notice you, that hurt you. Next we can't run in classroom or floor but we can run in the playground. Then we should be careful when we play basketball with other people in PE. Finally when we hurt, don't be worried about that and keep composure that can help you.
I hope these suggestions can help you.

Corrected essay:
I think it is important for us to keep safe at school because there are many people at school. And how can we keep people safe? First, we shouldn't fight with other people and we should get on well with others.
Second, we should pay attention to other people, because sometimes you are careful but someone else doesn't notice you, which could hurt you. Next, we can't run in the classroom or on the floor but we can run in the playground. Then we should be careful when we play basketball with other people in PE. Finally when we get hurt, don't be worried about that and stay composed. That can help you.
I hope these suggestions can help you.