Writing prompt: Housework

Student essay:
Teenagers should help their parents do housework. Every family has a lot of housework and everyone should learn to do something. As members of family,we need to do something for our family. Parents are responsible for the family events and they also make money so we should do household chores.
I often sweep the floor,block and wash the dishes. I think teenagers should do homework because it can effectively share for the parents,do not let parents worry about us and tell parents we grow up by action.
I think doing housework not only make the home clean,but also can create a clean environment,make parents happy and be proud of us.
Because of this,I am going to do plenty of small things during the winter holiday and making parents proud of me.

Corrected essay:
Teenagers should help their parents do housework. Every family has a lot of housework and everyone should learn to do something. As members of a family, we need to do something for our family. Parents are responsible for the family events and they also make money so we should do household chores.
I often sweep the floor, mop and wash the dishes. I think teenagers should do housework because it can effectively help share the household chores with parents, not let parents worry about us and show parents we are growing up through our actions.
I think doing housework not only makes the home clean, but also can create a clean environment, makes parents happy and makes them proud of us. Because of this, I am going to do plenty of small things during the winter holiday to make my parents proud of me.