Writing prompt: Summer Vacation

Student essay:
Here comes summer. We have worked hard for a whole term.Many students feel a bit tired, including me.
For this reason, my family advise me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in summer vacation. My father told me that my cousin would show us around the West Lake.
It is said that the scene of the West Lake is extremely fascinating and magnificent. According to our plan,we will spend a week on this trip. It is suggested that we should get ready for it ahead of time. Therefore,we booked the ticket for the train and purchase some present that cannot be found there for my cousin's family.From my perspective,we will have a good time.
I will also review what I have learnt at this term and what we will learn the next term. I hope that my summer vacation will be relaxing and meaningful.

Corrected essay:
Here comes summer. We have worked hard for a whole term. Many students feel a bit tired, including me.
For this reason, my family advises me to have a trip to Hangzhou with them to relax in the summer vacation. My father told me that my cousin would show us around the West Lake.
It is said that the scene of the West Lake is extremely fascinating and magnificent. According to our plan, we will spend a week on this trip. It is suggested that we should get ready for it ahead of time. Therefore, we booked the ticket for the train and purchased some presents that cannot be found there for my cousin's family. From my perspective, we will have a good time.
I will also review what I have learnt this term and what we will learn next term. I hope that my summer vacation will be relaxing and meaningful.