Writing prompt: The First Christmas without Homework

Student essay:
My name is U.I'm an American which is living in New York.Last week,I went to Beijing to have a trip.I went there by plane November 3.At 4 o'clock,I arrived in Beijing.I stayed there for four days.On the first day,I went to the Great Wall. It's so beatiful and majestic that I was very surprise.The next day I went to the Forbidden City.It's the place where the emperors lived.It's very large and beatiful.I think the emperors that lived there must be very happy.On the third day,I went to the Bird's Nest Stadium and the Water Cube.I have only seen them on TV.When I walked close,I was shocked by the beauty of it and I took many photos of it.On the last day,I finished my perfect trip and I am looking forward to go to Beijing next time.

Corrected essay:
My name is U. I'm an American who is living in New York. Last week, I went to Beijing to have a trip. I went there by plane on November 3. At 4 o'clock, I arrived in Beijing. I stayed there for four days. On the first day, I went to the Great Wall. It's so beautiful and majestic that I was very surprised. The next day I went to the Forbidden City. It's the place where the emperors lived. It's very large and beautiful. I think the emperors who lived there must have been very happy. On the third day, I went to the Bird's Nest Stadium and the Water Cube. I had only seen them on TV. When I walked close, I was shocked by the beauty of them and I took many photos of them. On the last day, I finished my perfect trip and I am looking forward to going to Beijing next time.