Writing prompt: The Advantages and Disadvantages of Private Cars

Student essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying cars.
With the number of private cars is increasing,not only something good but also something terrible
is happening.
On the other hand,there are some advantages.At first,it is convenient for office workers to go to conmany.They can go to work on time.Second,people who liking travling can go to someplace they want
to go by driving.Last,if driving insteads of walking,the old can not be tired to go outside.
However,there are also some disadvantages.For example,the traffic is often heavy in rush hours.
And the more and more traffic accidents are happening,many families were hurted.The air has
been polluted.So that the climate gets warmer.
In a word,everything has two ways.If you get something,you must lose something.
I only hope drivers can enjoy their lives a

Corrected essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying cars.
With the number of private cars increasing, not only something good but also something terrible is happening.
On the one hand, there are some advantages. At first, it is convenient for office workers to go to the company. They can go to work on time. Second, people who like traveling can go to someplace they want to go by driving. Last, if driving instead of walking, the old won't get tired when going outside. However, there are also some disadvantages. For example, the traffic is often heavy in rush hours.
And more and more traffic accidents are happening. Many families are hurt. The air has been polluted, so the climate gets warmer.
In a word, everything has two sides. If you get something, you must lose something.
I only hope drivers can enjoy their lives.