Writing prompt: The Leifeng Pagoda

Student essay:
Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Park is one of the most important national scenic area and histories site in China. The West Park covers an area of 6.39 square kilometers. Not only is the West Lake rich in beautiful sights, it also is well-know for its silk culture. A lot of tourists come to enjoy its unique charm every year. The most popular attraction of the West Lake is the Leifeng Pagoda. The Leifeng Pagoda is 71.679 meters high. There is home to spectacular Buddhist culture and poetry culture. Many tourists are also attracted by its beauty. Leifeng Pagoda also becomes famous by its romantic and sad love stories. One of the most famous is about White Lady and Xu Xian. White Lady was a beautiful lady. But she was a snake when she was young. She fell in love with Xu Xian and they finally got married. But White Lady was caught by Fahai because she was thought as a monster. And she was locked by Fahai in the Leifeng Pagoda. Tough had seen White Lady's true look, he still loved her so much. So he swept the Leifeng Pagoda in his whole life. Because of this moving end, there also becomes a place to tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.

Corrected essay:
Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Lake is one of the most important national scenic areas and historic sites in China. The West Lake covers an area of 6.39 square kilometers. Not only is the West Lake rich in beautiful sights, it also is well-known for its silk culture. A lot of tourists come to enjoy its unique charm every year. The most popular attraction of the West Lake is the Leifeng Pagoda. The Leifeng Pagoda is 71.679 meters high. It is home to spectacular Buddhist culture and poetry culture. Many tourists are also attracted by its beauty. Leifeng Pagoda also becomes famous for its romantic and sad love stories. One of the most famous is about White Lady and Xu Xian. White Lady was a beautiful lady. But she was a snake when she was young. She fell in love with Xu Xian and they finally got married. But White Lady was caught by Fahai because she was thought of as a monster. And she was locked by Fahai in the Leifeng Pagoda. Though Xu Xian had seen White Lady's true look, he still loved her so much. So he swept the Leifeng Pagoda his whole life. Because of this moving ending, it also becomes a place for tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.