Writing prompt: Mobile Phones in Our Life

Student essay:
With the development of science, cell phones come along andit become more and more popular with students.
Cell phone is proud technology in the twenty-first century, it helps a lot. It's very convenient for us in daily life. Firstly, students can keep in touch with their parents through sending short messegas and make call during the school. Secondly, students can learn more knowledge and communicate with others to build up a deep friend ship. What's more, students can broaden their eyes and learn more about the world via the cell phones.

Corrected essay:
With the development of science, cell phones come along and have become more and more popular with students. The cell phone is a proud technology in the twenty-first century, it helps a lot. It's very convenient for us in daily life. Firstly, students can keep in touch with their parents through sending short messages and making calls during school. Secondly, students can learn more knowledge and communicate with others to build up a deep friendship. What's more, students can broaden their horizons and learn more about the world via cell phones.