Writing prompt: Sharing

Student essay:
Now it's very important for us to share good ideas with others.
Lastweek our teacher gave us a difficult problem. We can't finish it by ourselves. My classmate didn't finish it too. So we took together and I shared my idea with then. They think it's very important. In the end we finish writing the problem. We feel very happy.
If you share your idea with others you can do something better, and you will feel very happy after that.

Corrected essay:
Now it's very important for us to share good ideas with others.
Last week our teacher gave us a difficult problem. We couldn't finish it by ourselves. My classmate didn't finish it either. So we talked together and I shared my idea with them. They thought it was very important. In the end we finished solving the problem. We felt very happy.
If you share your idea with others you can do something better, and you will feel very happy after that.