Writing prompt: After-School Activities

Student essay:
Nowadays,after-school activities are becoming moro and more popular in high schools
there are lots of after-school activities in our school,such as,sports,art,seeing English films and so on.I enjoy the activities so much.I love playing badminton and drawing best.Because I can keep fit by doing sports and also relax myself.What's more,I feel pleased when I complete a perfect work.
And I can give you some advice so that you can enjoy yourselves.First,you have to choose the activities that you'are interested in.Second,you'd better spend proper time on it in order not to affect your study.Besides,you can hold some activities for students to make them relaxed under the heavy stress.
Friends,if you want to lead a happy life and learn more skills,welcome to after-school activities.You will improve yourselves here.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays, after-school activities are becoming more and more popular in high schools.
There are lots of after-school activities in our school, such as sports, art, seeing English films and so on. I enjoy the activities so much. I love playing badminton and drawing best, because I can keep fit by doing sports and also relax. What's more, I feel pleased when I complete a perfect work.
And I can give you some advice so that you can enjoy yourselves. First, you have to choose the activities that you're interested in. Second, you'd better spend proper time on it in order not to affect your study. Besides, you can hold some activities for students to make them relax under heavy stress.
Friends, if you want to lead a happy life and learn more skills, welcome to after-school activities. You will improve yourselves here.