Writing prompt: My Teacher Mr. Moon

Student essay:
Born in France, Mr. Moon,an American who has Chinese nationality,is an active and humorous man of 40. Compared with other teachers, he always focuses more on his teaching methods but not the comments,so he can figure out various ways to make his class active.As a teacher,what he does a good job on is that he encouraged students to think about projects themselves, which enhanced students' abilities of self-teaching.What's more,helping students to learn how to analyse and solve problems offer students huge motivation to discover and to create. Most importantly,it is his wide range of knowledge that wins students' admiration.

Corrected essay:
Born in France, Mr. Moon, an American who has Chinese nationality, is an active and humorous man of 40. Compared with other teachers, he always focuses more on his teaching methods but not the comments, so he can figure out various ways to make his class active. As a teacher, he does a good job depending on that he encourages students to think about projects themselves, which enhances students' abilities of self-teaching. What's more, helping students to learn how to analyse and solve problems offers students huge motivation to discover and to create. Most importantly, it is his wide range of knowledge that wins students' admiration.