Writing prompt: Book Report of the Beach

Student essay:
This fiction reminds me of a famous classical Chinese writing Peach Blossom Spring which is also an utopian place. The ending of that classical Chinese writing is that the protagonist never finds such a place like paradise again after his leaving. It shows that these utopian places are always unreal and they can't last for ever as people still keep the humanity.
In this fiction, although the beach life seemed peaceful and animated, people were not so perfect there. As more and more tragic events came through, Richard got panicky as well as the camp members. In order to comfort the people, Sal even asked Richard to kill Karl who went mad after an accident with sharks. For this reason, Richard realized the beach was not so paradisiacal anymore and it was going to destruction, then he came to an idea of escaping. At this very moment, he managed to kill Christo who was saved from the accident with sharks by him but dying, in order to make his friend Jed willing to escape from the beach with him. The desire makes people do crazy things. Sal wanted Karl's death to keep the camp steady, and Richard killed the one he just saved to go back home. How unbelievable it is! That is one of the reasons why utopia is so unattainable. People get desire, they curse, they control others, and they kill. People also keep humanity, they trust others blindly, and they remain the viciousness without realizing. Eventually, the camp dismissed and the members just went back to the world.
Also, I think the beach is a way people escape from reality. They wish to isolate from the outside world but apparently they couldn't. They had the Rice Run, and they also need to buy some necessaries from outside for the celebration meal. They couldn't isolate from the outside completely. Richard realized this first so he determined to go back to reality. More and more people got off the island then. The camp dismissed. It disappeared as if it had never existed. Just like a beautiful dream.
Utopia won't last long.

Corrected essay:
This fiction reminds me of a famous classical Chinese writing Peach Blossom Spring which is also a utopian place. The ending of that classical Chinese writing is that the protagonist never finds such a place like paradise again after his leaving. It shows that these utopian places are always unreal and they can't last forever as people still keep the humanity.
In this fiction, although the beach life seemed peaceful and animated, people were not so perfect there. As more and more tragic events came through, Richard got panicky as well as the camp members. In order to comfort the people, Sal even asked Richard to kill Karl who went mad after an accident with sharks. For this reason, Richard realized the beach was not so paradisiacal anymore and it was going to destruction. Then he came to the idea of escaping. At this very moment, he managed to kill Christo who was saved from the accident with sharks by him but dying, in order to make his friend Jed willing to escape from the beach with him. The desire makes people do crazy things. Sal wanted Karl's death to keep the camp steady, and Richard killed the one he just saved to go back home. How unbelievable it is! That is one of the reasons why utopia is so unattainable. People have desires. They curse, they control others, and they kill others. People also keep humanity. They trust others blindly, and they remain vicious without realizing it. Eventually, the camp was dismissed and the members just went back to the world.
Also, I think the beach is a way for people to escape from reality. They wish to isolate themselves from the outside world but apparently they can't. They have the Rice Run, and they also need to buy some necessities from outside for the celebration meal. They can't isolate from the outside completely. Richard realized this first so he determined to go back to reality. More and more people got off the island then. The camp dismissed. It disappeared as if it had never existed. Just like a beautiful dream.
Utopia won't last long.