Writing prompt: A Speech on Good Eating Habits

Student essay:
Dear friends\nAs we all know,we are what we eat.Therefore,it is important for us to form healthy eating habits.More and more teenagers have an unhealthy diet . It is necessary for us to change it. Since the bad habits,like particular were deteriorating drastically in China.So we should advocate to have an activity which can change this situation. This prevent situation is bad for us. So we ought to have a new diet that is good for teenagers. We should eat less snacks and eat more varieties of food,like cabbage,onion ,to keep a balance. In my opinion,eat at regular hours is also important. If we don't attach importance to,we'll have poor constitution. So I propose that we should protect ourselves and pay more attention to our daily diet.

Corrected essay:
Dear friends,
As we all know, we are what we eat. Therefore, it is important for us to form healthy eating habits. More and more teenagers have an unhealthy diet. It is necessary for us to change it. Since the bad habits, in particular, were deteriorating drastically in China, we should advocate to have an activity that can change this situation. This situation is bad for us. So we ought to have a new diet that is good for teenagers. We should eat fewer snacks and eat more varieties of food, like cabbage and onion, to keep a balance. In my opinion, eating at regular hours is also important. If we don't attach importance to it, we'll have a poor constitution. So I propose that we should protect ourselves and pay more attention to our daily diet.