Writing prompt: My First Trip

Student essay:
I remember,my first trip is very exciting.My parents with me went to X When I was seven.This was my firsttake plane.I always look out of plane.I think myself just like a bird I get X.The weather is hot.But TianJin is winter.This hotel is very good.I live is very comfultable. Every day,my parents with me to visit some famous place.It is very interesting.And we stayed here two weeks.
That is my first trip.And I think,I do not remember it.Beacuse X is very beautiful.I want to go to there again.

Corrected essay:
I remember my first trip was very exciting. My parents and I went to X when I was seven. This was my first time taking a plane. I always looked out of the plane. I thought of myself just like a bird. When I got to X, the weather was hot. But Tianjin was in winter. The hotel was very good. Where I stayed was very comfortable. Every day, my parents and I visited some famous places. It was very interesting. And we stayed there for two weeks.
That was my first trip. And I think I will never forget it because X is very beautiful. I want to go there again.