Writing prompt: My Dream

Student essay:
Everyone has their dreams. But not all dreams can come true. Some persons want to be rich or famous overnight. But it is not useful. I have no ideals, too. When I was seven years old, I wanted to be a teacher. I think it 's a very good job. When I was ten years old, I want to be a soldier. So I think it's cool. When I grow up, I know the dream is very important. So I have a new definition of my dream. Now, I want to be a famous writer, like Lu Xun. My works can encourage hundreds of persons. People adore my ideas. I am lucky to take the article to children, to old man, to many people. Let them feel literary changes. Well, people know"Rome does not build in one day"! We must study hard. So we can succeed. I must study hard and make progress every day. Reading many books is my second selection. Then what am I first select? To sum up is about my dream. It's wonderful and great. I hope I can early complete my dream.

Corrected essay:
Everyone has their dreams. But not all dreams can come true. Some persons want to be rich or famous overnight. But it is not useful. I have no ideals, too. When I was seven years old, I wanted to be a teacher. I think it's a very good job. When I was ten years old, I wanted to be a soldier. I thought it was cool. When I grow up, I know the dream is very important. So I have a new definition of my dream. Now, I want to be a famous writer, like Lu Xun. My works can encourage hundreds of people. People adore my ideas. I am lucky to take the article to children, to old men, to many people. Let them feel literary changes. Well, people know "Rome was not built in a day"! We must study hard so we can succeed. I must study hard and make progress every day. Reading many books is my second selection. Then what is my first selection? To sum up, this is about my dream. It's wonderful and great. I hope I can complete my dream early.