Writing prompt: My Best Friend

Student essay:
Hello everyone my name is D. Today let me tell you something about my best friend.
My best friend is an enthusiastic boy,his name's Tony. He is sixteen years old. And he's not tall but he is a very smart person. We have too much resemblance,but we also have some differences,just like he is interested in too many other things. For example,he likes playing football,listening music and playing computer games and so on. In the school,he really is a good student,he studies hard,he is also modest to everyone. And he is always helping the other people. Remember before,he had patience to help me improve my English. I really appreciate him. So everyone in the school like he very much,he is very popular.
This is my best friend Tony,what do you think of him? Do you like he? I think you like him like me. So how's your best friend?

Corrected essay:
Hello everyone, my name is D. Today let me tell you something about my best friend.
My best friend is an enthusiastic boy, and his name's Tony. He is sixteen years old. And he's not tall but he is a very smart person. We have too much resemblance, but we also have some differences, just like he is interested in too many other things. For example, he likes playing football, listening to music and playing computer games and so on. In the school, he really is a good student. He studies hard, and he is also modest to everyone. And he is always helping other people. Remember before, he had patience to help me improve my English. I really appreciate him. So everyone in the school likes him very much, and he is very popular.
This is my best friend Tony. What do you think of him? Do you like him? I think you like him like me. So how's your best friend?