Writing prompt: Spring Festival

Student essay:
Dear dad and mum:
I'm Vickey.Now I want to tell you something about my life in Beijing during Spring Festival.First,I often study and communicate with my Chinese friends and I play sports with them,too.Besides,I have went to the historical sites and scenic spots,watched the Peking Opera,tried the tasty food,known about Chinese histories.Third,during the Spring Festival,I ate dumplings with my friends,I'm so happy.
I love my Chinese friends and I love my life in Beijing.Dad,mum,I love you two.
Yours Vickey

Corrected essay:
Dear Dad and Mum,
I'm Vickey. Now I want to tell you something about my life in Beijing during the Spring Festival. First, I often study and communicate with my Chinese friends and I play sports with them, too. Besides, I have gone to the historical sites and scenic spots, watched the Peking Opera, tried the tasty food, and learned about Chinese history. Third, during the Spring Festival, I ate dumplings with my friends. I'm so happy.
I love my Chinese friends and I love my life in Beijing. Dad and Mum, I love you two.
Yours,
Vickey