Writing prompt: Should We Keep Animals in Zoos?

Student essay:
To answer this question, we have a discussion with my classmates.
There are 40 per cent of students think animals should be kept in zoos. Because it is happy of people to see many different kinds of animals. And they think animals can be taken good care of.
However, 60 per cent of students think that animals like living in the natural environment. Becides, they think animals will not have freedom to do action if they are kept in the cages.
I think we should keep animals in the wild instead of in the zoos. The animals can grow well and live a happy life in the wild. It is our duty to protect the animals in nature. We shouldn't pollute the water and cut down the trees. We can make many nature reserves. Because it is big enough to live. I hope they can live comfortably.

Corrected essay:
To answer this question, I have a discussion with my classmates.
40 percent of students think animals should be kept in zoos. Because it makes people happy to see many different kinds of animals. And they think animals can be taken good care of.
However, 60 percent of students think that animals like living in the natural environment. Besides, they think animals will not have the freedom to do action if they are kept in cages.
I think we should keep animals in the wild instead of in zoos. The animals can grow well and live a happy life in the wild. It is our duty to protect the animals in nature. We shouldn't pollute the water or cut down the trees. We can make many nature reserves. Because they are big enough for animals to live in. I hope they can live comfortably.