Writing prompt: A Favorite Trip

Student essay:
Last year,I went to Beijing by train. I had a good time. There were many sights. The Great Wall is very beautiful and very long. I liked it very much. So I took many photos. Then I visited Tiananmen. It was very big. There were lots of people in it.
Iwent to Beijing Hutong. The people were friendly to me. They gave me lots of food. It was very delicious. This trip I felt excited. But I have never been to Xizang. I will go to Xizang next year.

Corrected essay:
Last year, I went to Beijing by train. I had a good time. There were many sights. The Great Wall was very beautiful and very long. I liked it very much. So I took many photos. Then I visited Tian'anmen. It was very big. There were lots of people in it.
I went to Beijing Hutong. The people were friendly to me. They gave me lots of food. It was very delicious. During this trip, I felt excited. But I have never been to Xizang. I will go to Xizang next year.