Writing prompt: My Good Friend

Student essay:
I have a friend.His name is Liu Qinglei and he is twelve years old.He is from China.He is a student and he is in Class 5 Grade 1.He has a friend.Her name is Betty.Betty is English.She is thirteen years old and she is in Class 2.She is a beautiful girl.His teacher is Mrs Green.She is American.She is a good teacher.

Corrected essay:
I have a friend. His name is Liu Qinglei and he is twelve years old. He is from China. He is a student and he is in Class 5, Grade 1. He has a friend. Her name is Betty. Betty is English. She is thirteen years old and she is in Class 2. She is a beautiful girl. His teacher is Mrs. Green. She is American. She is a good teacher.