Writing prompt: The Advantages and Disadvantages of Private Cars

Student essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying private cars.When it bring us convenience also bring something we don't want.Example it make the environment more and more bad and cause the traffic jam.It's make people become more lazy than before.It's not good for our health.But in the other hand,it make our life more convenience than we don't have it.Peoleo who want to go to the distance can choose to drive private car.It maybe more free.Or when you have something urgent,you can drive your car.
The privent cars have two face,on the one hand is good,on the other hand is bad.we should use the privent car in appropriate time.

Corrected essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying private cars. When it brings us convenience, it also brings something we don't want. For example, it makes the environment worse and causes traffic jams. It makes people become lazier than before. It's not good for our health. But on the other hand, it makes our life more convenient than when we don't have it. People who want to travel long distances can choose to drive a private car. It may be more freeing. Or when you have something urgent, you can drive your car.
Private cars have two sides: on the one hand, they are good. On the other hand, they are bad. We should use private cars in appropriate time.