Writing prompt: Our New Classmate

Student essay:
Our new pupil jack,comes from American. He is handsome young boy with thick classes and is of plump. He becomes popular among the students because he is humorous and outgoing. And he is very enthusiastic. When we had trouble of English,we will find him because. He's really willing to help us. He speak very fluently,so we have a very great communication with him. He plays basketball very well so we are willing to play with him. He is very serious about learning But we believe that he makes great progress by his own effort and our help. we really like hi. He's been the best.

Corrected essay:
Our new pupil Jack comes from America. He is a handsome young boy with thick glasses and is plump. He becomes popular among the students because he is humorous and outgoing. And he is very enthusiastic. When we have trouble with English, we will find him because he's really willing to help us. He speaks very fluently, so we have great communication with him. He plays basketball very well so we are willing to play with him. He is very serious about learning, but we believe that he makes great progress through his own effort and our help. We really like him. He's been the best.