Writing prompt: The Disadvantages and Advantages of Phones

Student essay:
Nowdays mobile phones are very common around us and especially used widly among students as it is convenience for us to contact with our parents.Besides,much fun is brought by it in order to make us excited and ralexed.The advantages of it attract teenagers to use .
In the other word,some teachers and parents have oppsite opinions because they think that using mobile phone is the most important reason which affects students' learning.For example, using mobile phones on class interferes teachers to teach and disperse students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledges that teachers mentioned.Meanwhile,the cheating softwares preseted on mobile phones like Wechat costs not only money but also time.It has bad influence on students' study.
In my opinion ,with the development of tecnology and transport ,mobile phones are supposed to usd by students for having so many advantages. However, as students,we should concentrate on study instead of ueing mobile phones.If we use it in the right way,parents will consideration us as well.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays mobile phones are very common around us and are especially used widely among students as they are convenient for us to contact our parents. Besides, they bring a lot of fun to us in order to make us excited and relaxed. The advantages of them attract teenagers to use them.
In other words, some teachers and parents have opposite opinions because they think that using mobile phones is the most important factor that affects students' learning. For example, using mobile phones in class interferes with teachers' teaching and disperses students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledge that teachers mentioned. Meanwhile, the chatting software present on mobile phones like WeChat costs not only money but also time. It has a bad influence on students' study.
In my opinion, with the development of technology and transport, mobile phones are supposed to be used by students for having so many advantages. However, as students, we should concentrate on study instead of using mobile phones. If we use them in the right way, parents will consider us as well.