Writing prompt: After-School Activities

Student essay:
Nowadays, after-school activities are becoming more and more popular in high schools.
Many students as well as I participant in many after-school activities. I took part in two activities, they are watching English films and sports. By watching English films, my English level has been improved. I also learn many new words which can be used in daily communication. By doing sports, such as running, rope skipping, I am becoming healthier. And I also get many new friends.
If you want to choose after-school activities, I will give you some advice. First ,think about what is your favorite things. For example, if you like drawing, you can take part in drawing activities . Second, you can choose some useful activities, like watching English films, it can improve your English level.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays, after-school activities are becoming more and more popular in high schools.
Many students as well as I participate in many after-school activities. I take part in two activities. They are watching English films and sports. By watching English films, my English level has improved. I also learn many new words which can be used in daily communication. By doing sports, such as running and rope skipping, I am becoming healthier. And I also make many new friends.
If you want to choose after-school activities, I will give you some advice. First, think about what your favorite things are. For example, if you like drawing, you can take part in drawing activities. Second, you can choose some useful activities, like watching English films. It can improve your English level.