Writing prompt: Welcome Exchange Student

Student essay:
Dear Chris,
I'm L, monitor of Class One, Grade Eleven, in C High Shool. I'm so glad to know that you are going to study in our class during your exchange study in China. Let me first tell you something basic and necessary. Our city, J, is in the north temperate zone. It's always hot and rainy in summer, freezing and snowy in winter. Spring and autumn are gorgeous and comfortable. Generally speaking, the weather here is fine.
Eating exerts an significant role in our daily life, and I beg that you must be curious about the food here in China. Let me introduce it briefly and I'm sure that you will be obsessed with the Tianjin food. Tianjin is famous for its local traditional dessert, such like the fried dough twist and the fried rice cake. People here is not keen on spicy and sour food, so I hope that you could get use to the food here as soon as possible.
Our class is just like a warm family. There are 32 girls and 9 boys in our class and they are all enthusiastic and interesting people. To lay a solid fundation for our friendship, they even prepared a welcome party for you! We all looking foward to making you adapt to your life here in China.
All in all, we hope that you can consider your school life with us here in China as an enjoyment. Just share your joy and sorrow with us. Don't be shy to talk about yourself! In this way, we can get a cleaer perspective of you and your life in your hometown.
I think this term can be a valuable experience for you and for us. We all expect your coming to China!
Your early reply will be appreciated!
Yours, L.

Corrected essay:
Dear Chris,
I'm L, monitor of Class One, Grade Eleven, in C High School. I'm so glad to know that you are going to study in our class during your exchange study in China. Let me first tell you something basic and necessary. Our city, J, is in the north temperate zone. It's always hot and rainy in summer, freezing and snowy in winter. Spring and autumn are gorgeous and comfortable. Generally speaking, the weather here is fine.
Eating plays a significant role in our daily life, and I bet that you must be curious about the food here in China. Let me introduce it briefly and I'm sure that you will be obsessed with the Tianjin food. Tianjin is famous for its local traditional desserts, such as the fried dough twist and the fried rice cake. People here are not keen on spicy and sour food, so I hope that you could get used to the food here as soon as possible.
Our class is just like a warm family. There are 32 girls and 9 boys in our class and they are all enthusiastic and interesting people. To lay a solid foundation for our friendship, they even prepared a welcome party for you! We are all looking forward to making you adapt to your life here in China.
All in all, we hope that you can consider your school life with us here in China as an enjoyment. Just share your joy and sorrow with us. Don't be shy to talk about yourself! In this way, we can get a clearer perspective of you and your life in your hometown.
I think this term can be a valuable experience for you and for us. We all expect your coming to China!
Your early reply will be appreciated!
Yours,
L.