Writing prompt: The Discussions of Beauty Contests

Student essay:
Everything has two sides and the thing that beauty contests be held among teenagers is not an exception. It has both advantages and disadvantages. Some students think that like beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provied a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and help them know how to select clothes in important public. However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances will lead to run blindly after appearances. In addition, it is a waste of time and money to participate in.
As far as I am concerned, I believe that inner beauty is more important. Consequently, I suggest that everyone should focus more on inner beauty.

Corrected essay:
Everything has two sides and the idea that beauty contests can be held among teenagers is not an exception. It has both advantages and disadvantages. Some students think that liking beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provides a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and helps them know how to select clothes for important public occasions. However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances, it will lead to blindly chasing of appearances. In addition, it is a waste of time and money to participate in.
As far as I am concerned, I believe that inner beauty is more important. Consequently, I suggest that everyone should focus more on inner beauty.