Writing prompt: Guangzhou Culture Festival

Student essay:
Guangzhou Culture Festival
In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou,our shool held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival"last Saturday.In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us

Corrected essay:
Guangzhou Culture Festival
In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou, our school held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival" last Saturday. In the traditional culture festival, a lot of activities were held. The Cantonese Opera Competition was my favourite activity. Many students took part in the competition, because the music sounded beautiful, and the clothes were very beautiful.
In the Picture Show, we could see how Guangzhou changed. And we could learn Guangzhou's history and culture. We ate a lot of delicious food in the Food Show.
I hope that next year my school can hold The World of Knowledge Show. It can teach us a lot of knowledge.