Writing prompt: My Dreaming Destination in Europe

Student essay:
My dreaming destination in Europe is Switzerland.Let me explain my choice and express my real thoughts on it.
Switzerland is a developed country which is situated in the middle of Europe and next to Austria,France,Italian and German.Besides it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with an large population of 7.5 million.
It's generally agreed that Berne,the capital of Switzerland,plays an important part in terms of politics and economy.And Geneva is known to all the world as a bustling and crowded city as well.
What's more,Switzerland actually has a number of rarely tourism resources and its natural sightseeing is indeed beautiful and unforgettable.As a result,it is considered the garden of the world.This is the point that most attracts me.
As far as I know Switzerland's watch,chemistry as well as food industry are also very popular and developed.
My description may have a brief impression on you,if you acquire more details just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.

Corrected essay:
My dream destination in Europe is Switzerland. Let me explain my choice and express my real thoughts on it.
Switzerland is a developed country which is situated in the middle of Europe and next to Austria, France, Italy and Germany. Besides, it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with a large population of 7.5 million.
It's generally agreed that Berne, the capital of Switzerland, plays an important part in terms of politics and economy. And Geneva is known to all the world as a bustling and crowded city as well.
What's more, Switzerland actually has a number of tourism resources and its natural sightseeing is indeed beautiful and unforgettable. As a result, it is considered the garden of the world. This is the point that most attracts me.
As far as I know, Switzerland's watch, chemical as well as food industries are also very popular and developed.
My description may leave a brief impression on you. If you acquire more details, just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.