Writing prompt: Online Shopping

Student essay:
Many people are fond to go shopping on the Internet these days, especially the young teenagers. It's sure that online shopping is popular. It's quite convenient to buy anything.
Recently, there are some opinions from people who are interesting about online shopping. Xiao Ming, a school student, likes going shopping. He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested him to buy books from Dang website. "It's really cool and cheap. I don't need to go out to buy anything." says Xiao Ming. Though it is highly popular around teenagers, some parents prefer to go shopping in the supermarket. They think the quality of the clothes on the Internet is too terrible.
Everything has two sides. Although there are some defects, the way of shopping also helps us to buy things easily. In my opinion, we can buy basic things from the credible stores on the Internet.

Corrected essay:
Many people are fond of going shopping on the Internet these days, especially young teenagers. It's sure that online shopping is popular. It's quite convenient to buy anything.
Recently, there have been some opinions from people who are interested in online shopping. Xiao Ming, a school student, likes going shopping. He has gone shopping on the Internet since his classmates suggested he buy books from the Dang website. "It's really cool and cheap. I don't need to go out to buy anything", says Xiao Ming. Though it is highly popular among teenagers, some parents prefer to go shopping in the supermarket. They think the quality of the clothes on the Internet is too terrible.
Everything has two sides. Although there are some defects, this way of shopping also helps us to buy things easily. In my opinion, we can buy basic things from credible stores on the Internet.