Writing prompt: Create a Green Campus

Student essay:
Dear friends,
I'm L from Senior Three. In order to create a green campus, l'd like to share my ideas. And l hope that everyone can do his or her bit.
First of all, we should know the importance of a green campus. For students, we can enjoy the green plants around us and have a good mood. It also does good to the air quality. For the school, it is a part of creating the harmonious atmosphere in campus. Therefore, everyone of us shall have the obligation of preserving the environment in campus and saving energy at school.
Many measures can be taken to create a green campus. First, we should have an environmental conscience. We can plant trees and flowers at some suitable place to make the environment more agreeable. What's more,we must save water and electricity. It is a way to save resource for today and tomorrow.
In brief, we should realize the significance of this activity and try every means in our reach. Only when everyone spares no effort to do these methods can we obtain a green campus.
That's all. Thank you.

Corrected essay:
Dear friends,
I'm L from Senior Three. In order to create a green campus, I'd like to share my ideas. And I hope that everyone can do his or her bit.
First of all, we should know the importance of a green campus. For students, we can enjoy the green plants around us and have a good mood. It also does good to the air quality. For the school, it is a part of creating a harmonious atmosphere on campus. Therefore, every one of us shall have the obligation of preserving the environment on campus and saving energy at school.
Many measures can be taken to create a green campus. First, we should have an environmental conscience. We can plant trees and flowers at some suitable places to make the environment more agreeable. What's more, we must save water and electricity. It is a way to save resources for today and tomorrow.
In brief, we should realize the significance of this activity and try every means in our reach. Only when everyone spares no effort to take these measures can we obtain a green campus.
That's all. Thank you.