Writing prompt: Should We Keep Animals in Zoos?

Student essay:
After learning unit 5,teacher especially organized a seminar of the subject entitled"Whether we should keep animals in zoos?
About 40% of participants agreed to keep animals in zoos.They thought that if we do that,citizen can appoach animals to watch them.Without any danger,animals can be taken good care of by the zoo keepers.
However,60% of participants objected to this opinion.Animals would like to live in the wild.The caged animals couldn't live freely.
In my opinion,animals should be kept in zoos.In this way,scientists can do more research about them. What's more,variety of endangered animals can avoid the threat of dying out.
To protect animals,people should form the habit to save what we use in daily life.The sourse of them is nature.Nature is the home of both animals and human beings!

Corrected essay:
After learning Unit 5, the teacher especially organized a seminar on the subject entitled "Whether we should keep animals in zoos?"
About 40% of participants agreed to keep animals in zoos. They thought that if we do that, citizens can approach animals to watch them. Without any danger, animals can be taken good care of by the zookeepers.
However, 60% of participants objected to this opinion. Animals would like to live in the wild. The caged animals can't live freely.
In my opinion, animals should be kept in zoos. In this way, scientists can do more research about them. What's more, a variety of endangered animals can avoid the threat of dying out.
To protect animals, people should form the habit of saving what we use in daily life. The source of them is nature. Nature is the home of both animals and human beings!