Writing prompt: As Humble as a Lamb

Student essay:
To most of us, Newton is such a great scientist as he changed our reception of the world in depth.
As a genius, his three laws of motion is still used in almost every part in our life. However, Newton was never proud of what he had created but just remained humble. His famous word 'If I can see a bit farther than others, it is because I'm standing on shoulders of giants' shows such great humility and, maybe that's why he was so famous. At the same time, Newton never stopped trying to know more just like a lamb that is curious about everything new. He described himself as a boy who was collecting shells on the beach but knew nothing about the ocean in front of him. So he didn't stop working hard.
In the history appeared so many great person but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, but Newton did. So it is why I regard him as my idol.

Corrected essay:
To most of us, Newton is such a great scientist as he changed our perception of the world in depth.
As a genius, his three laws of motion are still used in almost every part of our lives. However, Newton was never proud of what he had created but just remained humble. His famous words, "If I can see a bit further than others, it is because I'm standing on the shoulders of giants." show such great humility, and maybe that's why he is so famous. At the same time, Newton never stops trying to know more, just like a lamb that is curious about everything new. He described himself as a boy who was collecting shells on the beach but knew nothing about the ocean in front of him. So he didn't stop working hard.
In the history, so many great people have appeared, but it was also difficult for those famous to be humble, yet Newton was. So, that is why I regard him as my idol.