Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
The Spring Festival is considered as a traditional festival that people get togrther to celebrate the arrive of the new year.During those days,the families are usually happy and busy.
My Spring Festival was spent in my grandparent's home.On the first day of the New Year,I helped my parents put up paper cuts and made dumplings.We saw beautiful fireworks through the windows at night and watched the Spring Festival party together.We were so excited that we have chatted with each other for a long time.But the next day,I also got up early to visit relatives.
Though my Spring Festival is common,I am happy with it as well,because everyone is alive and talk with smile at the special festival.

Corrected essay:
The Spring Festival is considered as a traditional festival where people get together to celebrate the arrival of the new year. During those days, families are usually happy and busy.
My Spring Festival was spent in my grandparents' home. On the first day of the New Year, I helped my parents put up paper cuts and made dumplings. We saw beautiful fireworks through the windows at night and watched the Spring Festival party together. We were so excited that we chatted with each other for a long time. The next day, I also got up early to visit relatives.
Though my Spring Festival was common, I was happy with it as well, because everyone was alive and talked with smiles at the special festival.