Writing prompt: Care About the Environment

Student essay:
Dear editor,
Environmental problems are becoming more and more serious all over the world.
First the population of the world is raising so rapidly that it causes food shortage. In order to solve this problem, people have to overdevelop the plough. Too many trees are also cut down. Besides, because of the waste of people's daily using water, water resource is deficient now.And the air is polluted heavily.
I suggest that take strategy sustainable development.It's a good idea to use more alternative energy and follow the " reduce, reuse, recycle" principle.
I hope we will live in a fine condition in the future. Protecting environment is our duty.

Corrected essay:
Dear editor,
Environmental problems are becoming more and more serious all over the world.
First, the population of the world is rising so rapidly that it causes food shortage. In order to solve this problem, people have to overdevelop the plough. Too many trees are also cut down. Besides, because of the waste of people's daily use of water, water resources are deficient now. And the air is polluted heavily.
I suggest that we take the strategy of sustainable development. It's a good idea to use more alternative energy and follow the "reduce, reuse, recycle" principle.
I hope we will live in a fine condition in the future. Protecting the environment is our duty.