Writing prompt: Congratulations

Student essay:
Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china yet so I invite you to china my hometone to travel around . I will take you to see the famous and beautiful places in china

Corrected essay:
First of all, congratulations on being admitted to Princeton University.
I will give you some advice on your study. Of course, you should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class, because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the teachers questions to let the teachers pay attention to you, so you can study very well. I believe in you.
I think you haven't been to China yet so I invite you to China, my hometown, to travel around. I will take you to see the famous and beautiful places in China.