Writing prompt: Scribbling and Littering

Student essay:
The reason why I 'm writing to you is that I saw people scribbling and littering wherever they liked when I was traveling at the tourist attractions.
My heart was cold when I stood on the same ground with them.How could people make the payments to nature like this?In my opinion,they need to be punished, don't they?First and foremost,it is the environment in which human beings are developing for thousands of years.Secondly,I can't stand that a person lives without a kind and modest heart in this peaceful world.
Therefore,I've got some suggestions for you to protect our social environment. To start with,giving advice to fine those who is not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them away from it.Moreover,you'd better help people have a clearer idea about the environment by enhancement of education.

Corrected essay:
The reason why I'm writing to you is that I saw people scribbling and littering wherever they liked when I was traveling at the tourist attractions.
My heart was cold when I stood on the same ground with them. How could people make the payments to nature like this? In my opinion, they need to be punished, don't they? First and foremost, it is the environment in which human beings have been developing for thousands of years. Secondly, I can't stand that a person lives without a kind and modest heart in this peaceful world.
Therefore, I've got some suggestions for you to protect our social environment. To start with, giving advice on fining those who are not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them from destroying the environment. Moreover, you'd better help people have a clearer idea about environment by enhancing education.