Writing prompt: My First Day at High School

Student essay:
Monday,Sept.3 Fine
Today was the first day of my new life. I looked at my new books and checked everything for the new school year. I was excited as well as worried.
I was very excited because I can spend my high school in an ideal school. I was very worried because I didn't know about the teacher and students in my class.
When I arrived at school , I found my classmates and teachers were very friendly , I soon forget my nervousness and feel at home.
While I got home , I won't worry any more and I believe I will have fun at this new school every day.

Corrected essay:
Monday, Sept. 3 Fine
Today was the first day of my new life. I looked at my new books and checked everything for the new school year. I was excited as well as worried.
I was very excited because I could spend my high school in an ideal school. I was very worried because I didn't know about the teachers and students in my class.
When I arrived at school, I found my classmates and teachers were very friendly. I soon forgot my nervousness and felt at home.
When I got home, I didn't worry anymore and I believed I would have fun at this new school every day.