Writing prompt: Should High School Students Get Online Frequently?

Student essay:
Recently I've carried out a survey on whether high school students should get online and my classmates hold different opinions on it.
Some of them think we should do like this.It can help us getting knowledge,widen our eyes.And we also are able to communicate and share with our friends.Above all,we can play games to relaxed when we feel tired.
The others are against the standpoint. They supposed that it do harm to our eyes.And it wastes our time when we wallowed playing computer games and chatting on line.
In my opinion, we should get online appropriate as students.we can study from websites on the Internet and make our mind relaxed.In a word,we should get online if we can achieve the balance between study and getting online better.

Corrected essay:
Recently I've carried out a survey on whether high school students should get online and my classmates hold different opinions on it.
Some of them think we should do this. It can help us gain knowledge and widen our eyes. And we are also able to communicate and share with our friends. Above all, we can play games to relax when we feel tired.
The others are against this standpoint. They suppose that it does harm to our eyes. And it wastes our time when we wallow in playing computer games and chatting online. In my opinion, we should get online appropriately as students. We can study from websites on the Internet and make our mind relaxed. In a word, we should get online if we can achieve the balance between study and getting online better.