Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
The Spring Festival which is celebrated on February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays. It lasts about fifteen days, during the festival people do not work except for the workers on duty. Students don't go to school, and shops are closed.
Because of this reason, we had to buy some necessary food a week ahead of time. Besides we did some cleaning so that it might bring us good luck. Further more on New Year's Eve, we got together ate dumplings and watch Spring Festival Gala. In addition it's excited for children to explode fireworks. What's more children like me received lucky money from our family. The next few days, I called on my relatives for the new year.
In general thanks to the Spring Festival I knew more about Chinese customs and became more polite. Thus I think it's meaningful to celebrate this traditional festival.

Corrected essay:
The Spring Festival, which is celebrated in February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays. It lasts about fifteen days. During the festival, people do not work except for the workers on duty. Students don't go to school, and shops are closed.
Because of this reason, we had to buy some necessary food a week ahead of time. Besides, we did some cleaning so that it might bring us good luck. Furthermore, on New Year's Eve, we got together, ate dumplings, and watched the Spring Festival Gala. In addition, it's exciting for children to explode fireworks. What's more, children like me received lucky money from our family. In the next few days, I called on my relatives for the new year.
In general, thanks to the Spring Festival, I know more about Chinese customs and became more polite. Thus, I think it's meaningful to celebrate this traditional festival.