Writing prompt: I Would Like Students Have More Chance to Choose

Student essay:
Our college entrance examination will be changed in 2 years,especially for English exam.In my opinion,this change is good for students.We can only have one examination now,and it means that we have only one chance to choose our college.In China,college entrance examination is one of the most important opportunities to change a people's life.
So,now a new policy will be carried out that students can choose the time and the times.It's really good news for students.English is our second language,but we spend too much time on it.If we can define it as a skills,we may not concentrate on grade.By the way,if we fail one examination we can try again,so we can do our best to learn it.
I think the chance of the examination will be welcomed for students.

Corrected essay:
Our college entrance examination will be changed in 2 years, especially for the English exam. In my opinion, this change is good for students. We can only have one examination now, and it means that we have only one chance to choose our college. In China, the college entrance examination is one of the most important opportunities to change a person's life.
So, now a new policy will be carried out that students can choose the time and the times. It's really good news for students. English is our second language, but we spend too much time on it. If we can define it as a skill, we may not concentrate on grades. By the way, if we fail one examination, we can try again, so we can do our best to learn it.
I think the chance of the examination will be welcomed by students.