Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
Hello,everyone.My name is L.Today,I'll talk you with my favourite festival.My favourite festival is Mother's Day.So,why do I like it?
Firstly,in many western festivals,Mother's Day is most warmth and make sense.Secondly,I prefer Mother's Day because it can let us experience the affection and the affection of the mother.Thirdly,we can be grateful to her mother,return her love.
It is obvious that we all love our mother,so I am looking forward to Chinese mother's Day.And set it as a statutory holiday.like this,we can let all people love her.

Corrected essay:
Hello, everyone. My name is L. Today, I'll talk to you about my favourite festival. My favourite festival is Mother's Day. So, why do I like it?
Firstly, in many western festivals, Mother's Day is the warmest and most meaningful. Secondly, I prefer Mother's Day because it can let us experience the affection and the affection of a mother. Thirdly, we can be grateful to our mother and return her love.
It is obvious that we all love our mother, so I am looking forward to a Chinese Mother's Day and setting it as a statutory holiday. Like this, we can let all people love their mothers.