Writing prompt: My Free Time

Student essay:
My name is Amy. I am a middle school student. I like eating delicious food and drawing. In my free time, I like playing the computer games ,watching TV and playing with my brother and sister. I often stay at home with my family in my free time. On the weekends , I usually go to the park with my friends when I finish my school.

Corrected essay:
My name is Amy. I am a middle school student. I like eating delicious food and drawing. In my free time, I like playing computer games, watching TV and playing with my brother and sister. I often stay at home with my family in my free time. On the weekends, I usually go to the park with my friends when I finish school.