Writing prompt: The Early Bird Catches the Worm

Student essay:
In my life,I frequently sound a proverb is that:"the early bird catches the worm." which gives me benefits on both study and life.
The proverb means :the more diligent wo give ,the more gains wo will have. For example, my junior high school classmate which was not good at study,he liked playing computer,but in someday he suddenly knows that study is more essential than playing computer .So from that time,he forced himself to study for junior high school graduation test and didn't playing computer from that time,he spent more and more time on study.In thus,he got a very good score at last. He put more diligent on study,so he gain the success.
"The early bird catches the worm." This is a useful proverb ,I hope every student can keep it in mind

Corrected essay:
In my life, I frequently hear a proverb, "The early bird catches the worm," which benefits me in both study and life.
The proverb means: the more diligence we give, the more gains we will have. For example, my junior high school classmate, who was not good at studying, but liked playing computer games, one day suddenly realized that studying is more essential than playing computer games. So from that time, he forced himself to study for the junior high school graduation test and didn't play computer games anymore. He spent more and more time studying. In this way, he got a very good score at last. He put more effort into studying, so he gained success.
"The early bird catches the worm." This is a useful proverb. I hope every student can keep it in mind.