Writing prompt: My Mother

Student essay:
My mother is 43 years old and she is no different from ordinary people. About my mum I summed up the following points . In terms of personality :She is so kind and honest that is very popular . In work :My mother is very careful , she doesn't allow any mistake, so that some workers are a bit afraid of her, but in private , she is courteous and accessible. Finally :like all mothers, she is responsible and devotes most of her efforts to our family . These years I found that wrinkles on the corner of her eyes. I feel sorry to her, I decide to admitted to the University to repayher. I love my mother very much. Years you don't hurt her

Corrected essay:
My mother is 43 years old and she is no different from ordinary people. About my mum, I summed up the following points. In terms of personality: She is so kind and honest that she is very popular. In work: My mother is very careful; she doesn't allow any mistakes, so some workers are a bit afraid of her. But in private, she is courteous and accessible. Finally, like all mothers, she is responsible and devotes most of her efforts to our family. These years, I have found wrinkles at the corners of her eyes. I feel sorry for her, and I decide to get admitted to the university to repay her. I love my mother very much. Years, please don't hurt her.