Writing prompt: Discussion about Listening Test

Student essay:
The students of our school had a discussion about if the listening test in the National Matriculation English Test should be abandoned.The results are as follows.
The students who hold an idea of keeping the listening test think that listening is important.Listening is one of the four skills of language,so it cannot be ignored.We get information by means of listening and with the developing of international cooperation,the ability of listening and speaking needs improving.
However, other students are in favour of canceling the listening test.They find it unfair to have different quality of listening indifferent places.It's obivious that English teachers and language equipments are different between cities and countries.Not everyone has to communicate with foriegners face to face if we look further.

Corrected essay:
The students of our school had a discussion about if the listening test in the National Matriculation English Test should be abandoned. The results are as follows.
The students who hold an idea of keeping the listening test think that listening is important. Listening is one of the four skills of language, so it cannot be ignored. We get information by means of listening and with the development of international cooperation, the ability of listening and speaking needs improving.
However, other students are in favour of canceling the listening test. They find it unfair to have different qualities of listening in different places. It's obvious that English teachers and language equipment are different between cities and countries. Not everyone has to communicate with foreigners face to face if we look further.