Writing prompt: My Classmate

Student essay:
My new classmate,Jake,comes from America. He is very easygoing and humorous. And because of his easygoing and humorous,he becomes popular among us. What's more,he is always ready to help others ,so that all of us like to make friends with him or tell him the history of China.
Although he is an American,his chinese is excellent and he knows many idioms.
Finally,he is good at playing basketball either. He often plays basketball with other boys after class or in P.E. class. In short,we all like him very much!

Corrected essay:
My new classmate, Jake, comes from America. He is very easygoing and humorous. And because of his easygoing and humorous nature, he becomes popular among us. What's more, he is always ready to help others, so that all of us like to make friends with him or tell him the history of China.
Although he is an American, his Chinese is excellent and he knows many idioms.
Finally, he is good at playing basketball too. He often plays basketball with other boys after class or in P.E. class. In short, we all like him very much!