Writing prompt: Should High School Students Get Online Frequently?

Student essay:
Recently I've carried out a survey on whether high school students should get online frequently and my classmates hold different opinions on it.
Some of my classmates think it necessary to get online.To their mind,the Internet can make it convient to study.Through the Internet,they have access to braoden their minds.Besides,they can wach movies.read novels.cheat with others and so on.So they don't think that it's bad for us to get online.
In others' opinions,the Internet isn't good for students.Beacuse of the attract of kinds of things in the Internet,we sometimes hardly restrain oyrselves.They think students should pay more attention to study.The information will make students lose themselves.
To my mind,getting online has both advantages and disanvantages.If we use the Internet correctly and don't depend too much on it,we will not be rapt in the Internet.

Corrected essay:
Recently, I've carried out a survey on whether high school students should get online frequently and my classmates hold different opinions on it.
Some of my classmates think it is necessary to get online. To their mind, the Internet can make it convenient to study. Through the Internet, they have access to broaden their minds. Besides, they can watch movies, read novels, chat with others and so on. So they don't think that it's bad for us to get online.
In others' opinions, the Internet isn't good for students. Because of the attraction of all kinds of things on the Internet, we sometimes hardly restrain ourselves. They think students should pay more attention to studying. The information will make students lose themselves.
To my mind, getting online has both advantages and disadvantages. If we use the Internet correctly and don't depend too much on it, we will not be rapt in the Internet.