Writing prompt: To Kill or Not to Kill

Student essay:
The death penalty has been one of the most controversial debates throughout history. More and more development country have been abolished the death penalty. Because they think that everybody all has their rights, and death penalty is an inhumane act .But as far as I am concerned , in china ,death penalty should not be canceled .
Although the modern social law already get rapid progress , but all kinds of new crime continue emerge in endlessly , some to human society cause serious damage .Many people may consider that death penalty is a violent and brutal act, and it is against human moral principles and does little good for the country .But death penalty should not be abolished in my minds ,because death penalty can reduce crime, creating a harmonious environment .Beside ,the idea that a murder must pay with his life has been deeply rooted and firmly planted in the minds of Chinese ,it is nature's law and earth's way .So if our country abolishes the death penalty ,most people will not agree .Because in our country ,the capital punishment only applied to those people who commit the most heinous crimes ,that's what they deserved .
Finally ,I think that death penalty should not be abolished in china .Because in china ,there is a saying that :an eye for an eye .Our country's legal system fit that saying well ,if the person who has killed many people can still be alive ,our society will in a mass .

Corrected essay:
The death penalty has been one of the most controversial debates throughout history. More and more developing countries have abolished the death penalty because they think that everybody has their rights, and death penalty is an inhumane act. But as far as I am concerned, in China, death penalty should not be canceled.
Although the modern social law has already made rapid progress, all kinds of new crimes continue to emerge endlessly, causing serious damage to human society. Many people may consider that death penalty is a violent and brutal act, and it is against human moral principles and does little good for the country. But death penalty should not be abolished in my mind, because death penalty can reduce crime, creating a harmonious environment. Besides, the idea that a murderer must pay with his life has been deeply rooted and firmly planted in the minds of Chinese. It is nature's law and earth's way. So if our country abolishes the death penalty, most people will not agree because in our country, the capital punishment is only applied to those people who commit the most heinous crimes. That's what they deserve.
Finally, I think that death penalty should not be abolished in China because in China, there is a saying: an eye for an eye. Our country's legal system fits that saying well. If the person who has killed many people can still be alive, our society will be in a mess.