Writing prompt: My Dream

Student essay:
Different people have different dreams. Some people dream of making a lot of money. Some people dream of living a happy life. I also have a dream. My dream is to be a rich man, and then I want to be a big boss.
I want to be real estate! Build hundreds of buildings, and investment to my country, China, because I love my hometown. I want to buy a running car, too! After that, I want to buy a country house, and returned to my parents, grandparents and all the relatives.
Go sp for as to as for how to realize dream. I think if I want to come true the dream, I must learn hard and she learned. So I can come true dream hard!

Corrected essay:
Different people have different dreams. Some people dream of making a lot of money. Some people dream of living a happy life. I also have a dream. My dream is to be a rich man, and then I want to be a big boss.
I want to be in real estate, building hundreds of buildings and investing in my country, China, because I love my hometown. I want to buy a running car, too! After that, I want to buy a country house, and return to my parents, grandparents and all the relatives.
As for how to realize my dream, I think if I want my dream to come true, I must study hard and work hard. So I can make my dream come true!