Writing prompt: Daming's Holiday Plan

Student essay:
Daming gets up and washes his face at half past eight.He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine,and he write his homework servious from nine to half past ten.He works hard,isn't he?From half past ten to half past eleven,Daming does exercise in the park.He has a delicious lunch at twelve o'clock,and he has IT classes or English classes from one to three o'clock.Daming reads many kinds of books from four to six o'clock.He has a bit of dinner at half past six.From seven to eight o'clock,Daming searches for information on the Internet or watches his favourite TV programs.Daming packs his things from half past eight to nine,and he goes tobed at half past nine.
Daming's holiday plan well,we should learn from him.

Corrected essay:
Daming gets up and washes his face at half past eight. He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine, and he writes his homework seriously from nine to half past ten. He works hard, doesn't he? From half past ten to half past eleven, Daming does exercise in the park. He has a delicious lunch at twelve o'clock, and he has IT classes or English classes from one to three o'clock. Daming reads many kinds of books from four to six o'clock. He has a bit of dinner at half past six. From seven to eight o'clock, Daming searches for information on the Internet or watches his favourite TV programs. Daming packs his things from half past eight to nine, and he goes to bed at half past nine.
Daming's holiday plan is well-organized. We should learn from him.