Writing prompt: Online Shopping

Student essay:
More and more Internet users in china find the fun Online shopping .China Internet Network Information Center said that there are outnumber 87millions chinese online shopping first half of the year.It means that there are one fourth of Internet users in China have been Online shopping.Most of Online shoppers are students and white-collar workers aged 18-30 years,monthy income in 1000 yuan-3000 yuan.The women Online shopping more than men.Cloth and household products are the most of things by the Online shopping .We estimate that the trend of Online shopping will be increase.This reflects the strong development momentum of Chinese econimy.

Corrected essay:
More and more Internet users in China find the fun of online shopping. China Internet Network Information Center said that there are over 87 million Chinese online shoppers in the first half of the year. It means that one fourth of Internet users in China have been online shopping. Most online shoppers are students and white-collar workers aged from 18 to 30 years, with a monthly income between 1000 yuan and 3000 yuan. Women shop online more than men. Clothes and household products are the most common things bought through online shopping. We estimate that the trend of online shopping will increase. This reflects the strong development momentum of the Chinese economy.