Writing prompt: An Exam

Student essay:
Last month, more than one hundred students admitted part in an exam in our school. When the school announced results, in my surprise, my friend, Tom was at the top of list, but I was at the bottom of school report card. At that time, not only Tom advised us to hard work, but also he agreed to make offers to lessons. After that time, I am going to formulate time. What's more, I do more exercises in order to improve my study, I decided to try my best in study, and my aim was to make progress in learning.I think studying is important for us now.

Corrected essay:
Last month, more than one hundred students took part in an exam in our school. When the school announced the results, to my surprise, my friend Tom was at the top of the list, but I was at the bottom of the school report card. At that time, not only did Tom advise us to work hard, but he also agreed to offer help with lessons. After that time, I formulated a schedule. What's more, I did more exercises in order to improve my studies. I decided to try my best in studying, and my aim was to make progress in learning. I think studying is important for us now.