Writing prompt: Care About the Environment

Student essay:
Nowadays,poison gases which are let out from cars or factories and the excessive disafforestation in many countries lead to a worse and worse air quality.What's more,some big cities are seriously polluted.As for people,they inhale the toxic air pollutant which will cause lung cancer or other disease and then do harm to their body.Therefore,actions like controlling the quantity of cars and banning the factories from discharging pollution need to be taken immediately.Last but not least,using public vehicles like buses or walk when you're out is also a proper way to protect our environment.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays, poison gases which are let out from cars or factories and the excessive deforestation in many countries lead to worse and worse air quality. What's more, some big cities are seriously polluted. As for people, they inhale the toxic air pollutants which will cause lung cancer or other diseases and then do harm to their bodies. Therefore, actions like controlling the number of cars and banning factories from discharging pollution need to be taken immediately. Last but not least, using public vehicles like buses or walking when you're out is also a proper way to protect our environment.