Writing prompt: Should We Keep Animals in Zoos?

Student essay:
Last week, we held a meeting about "Shall we keep animals at zoos ?"It was excited that we used all our abilities to explain our topics.
Forty percents of us think people should raise animals at zoos .Because if we do so ,we can see all kinds of animals without going to some dangerous places . And they will be taken good care of instead of living in the forests on their own to face natural enemies . So , it is better to keep them in the zoos than let them live in the nature .
Sixty percents of us think people should not keep animals in the zoos .Because they are not the real homes of animals .Like human beings ,animals also like free lives. It is not free of animals to live in such a small cages.
In my opinion ,It is cruel for us to feed animals in zoos .First ,animals are our friends ,so they should live in the nature just like we live in the houses . Second ,living in the forest can practice their living skills.The animals in the zoos will die easily when they return in the nature. Last but not least, if there are no more
animals in the wild , the ecological balance will be broken.
Therefore , it is better for animals to live in the wild than live in the zoos .

Corrected essay:
Last week, we held a meeting about "Shall we keep animals at zoos?" It was exciting that we used all our abilities to explain our topics.
Forty percent of us think people should raise animals at zoos because if we do so, we can see all kinds of animals without going to some dangerous places. And they will be taken good care of instead of living in the forests on their own to face natural enemies. So, it is better to keep them in zoos than let them live in nature.
Sixty percent of us think people should not keep animals in zoos because they are not the real homes of animals. Like human beings, animals also like free lives. It is not free for animals to live in such small cages.
In my opinion, it is cruel for us to feed animals in zoos. First, animals are our friends, so they should live in nature just like we live in the houses. Second, living in the forest can help them practice their living skills. The animals in the zoos will die easily when they return to nature. Last but not least, if there are no more animals in the wild, the ecological balance will be broken.
Therefore, it is better for animals to live in the wild than to live in zoos.