Writing prompt: My Favorite Person, Nightingale

Student essay:
Nightingale born in Italy on May 12, 1820. She grew in a rich family and she had a good education. She chose the nurse as her profession in 1850. But the nurse in the past time was the most cheapest profession. So her parents didn't want her to be a nurse. But she insisted it. .In 1853, Britain, France, and other countries of the outbreak of the Crimean War with Russia. Nightingale went to the first line. She took care of the injured soldiers everyday. She passed away in 1910. Now the whole world to make the International Nurse' day on May 12 to thank her for her pay.

Corrected essay:
Nightingale was born in Italy on May 12, 1820. She grew up in a rich family and she had a good education. She chose nursing as her profession in 1850. But nursing in the past was the least respected profession. So her parents didn't want her to be a nurse. But she insisted on it. In 1853, the Crimean War broke out between Britain, France, and other countries with Russia. Nightingale went to the first line. She took care of the injured soldiers everyday. She passed away in 1910. Now the whole world celebrates the International Nurses' Day on May 12 to thank her for her contributions.