Writing prompt: Lixia's Vacation

Student essay:
Lixia is an eleven-year-old girl from China. She likes traveling because she thinks it's enjoyable. She went somewhere famous just like Beijing and London,the trips were both interesting,but there are also some differences between them. Last year,Lixia arrived in London by plane. The weather there was really wet because it was often rainy,and that's the reason why people there always go out with an umbrella. Lixia visited many museums such as the British museum,and she saw something special and took quite a few photos there. She also had some special meals in London,but she thought they were not so delicious. This year,Lixia took a train to Beijing. It was so cold there that Lixia caught a little cold. She went to the Great Wall,the palace museum and Tian'anmen square in excitement. There were lots of visitors from all around the world. She had some special food in Beijing and they tasted pretty good. Lixia had fun visiting London and Beijing.She enjoyed herself by traveling.

Corrected essay:
Lixia is an eleven-year-old girl from China. She likes traveling because she thinks it's enjoyable. She went somewhere famous like Beijing and London. The trips were both interesting, but there were also some differences between them. Last year, Lixia arrived in London by plane. The weather there was really wet because it was often rainy, and that's the reason why people there always go out with an umbrella. Lixia visited many museums such as the British Museum, and she saw something special and took quite a few photos there. She also had some special meals in London, but she thought they were not so delicious. This year, Lixia took a train to Beijing. It was so cold there that Lixia caught a slight cold. She went to the Great Wall, the Palace Museum and Tian'anmen Square in excitement. There were lots of visitors from all around the world. She had some special food in Beijing and it tasted pretty good. Lixia had fun visiting London and Beijing. She enjoyed herself by traveling.