Writing prompt: After-School Activities

Student essay:
Students are supposed to take an active action to join more activities,and I will say something about this matter.
Sports is very common in our life.In order to stay fit,we should take much exercise as we can.Jogging really is one of these easy ways for us.It can not only make us relax but also build up our bodies well.
If you would like to do well in English quickly,watching more English movies may be very useful.It will improve your abilities so as to speak English and other foreign languages well.
What is more?You can take part in community activities such as reading club as well as magic club.After you do that,you will make more friends than before.
How to choose after-school activities?I think that it depends on your favourites or interest.Only you like this activity,you can completely do it well.I hope that you will find it correctly.

Corrected essay:
Students are supposed to take active action to join more activities, and I will say something about this matter. Sport is very common in our life. In order to stay fit, we should take as much exercise as we can. Jogging is really one of these easy ways for us. It can not only make us relax but also build up our bodies well.
If you would like to do well in English learning quickly, watching more English movies may be very useful. It will improve your ability to speak English and other foreign languages well.
What is more? You can take part in community activities such as reading club as well as magic club. After you do that, you will make more friends than before.
How to choose after-school activities? I think that it depends on your favourites or interest. Only if you like this activity, can you completely do it well. I hope that you will find it correctly.