Writing prompt: The Mid-Autumn Festival

Student essay:
The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15th of the eighth month of our chinese lunar calendar. It is one of the Chinese traditional festivals which play a significant role in Chinese culture. Since it is on this day when a ordinary Chinese family can gather together, no matter how busy they are and how far they have left home.
There are various activities the family can do together. Not only can they enjoy the full moon, but also have a taste of moon cakes. what's more, calling on friends as well as having an agreeable tour is also a considerable choice. Obviously, the Mid-Autumn Festival do provide us with a precious opportunity of family's accompany.

Corrected essay:
The Mid-Autumn Festival falls on the 15th of the eighth month of our Chinese lunar calendar. It is one of the Chinese traditional festivals which play a significant role in Chinese culture. Since it is on this day when an ordinary Chinese family can gather together, no matter how busy they are and how far they have left home. There are various activities the family can do together. Not only can they enjoy the full moon, but also have a taste of moon cakes. What's more, calling on friends as well as having an agreeable tour is also a considerable choice. Obviously, the Mid-Autumn Festival does provide us with a precious opportunity for family’s company.