Writing prompt: 2015 Gaokao Past Paper National Volume II

Student essay:
Dear Joan,
My name is X.I made a plan which is to go to the nursing house with my classmates to enjoy the Double Ninth Festival.Now let me tell you something about my plan and I hope you will go with us together.
As I know that you like the Chinese festival very much so I want to invite you to go with us.We will have many interesting things to do there such as make dumplings and have some performances.I think you must be liked it.Make dumplings is exciting and we can do it together.So,join us please,I am waiting for you.
We will go to the nursing house at 7:30 and go back at 5:00 in the evening.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
X

Corrected essay:
Dear Joan,
My name is X. I made a plan to go to the nursing house with my classmates to enjoy the Double Ninth Festival. Now let me tell you something about my plan and I hope you will go with us.
As I know, you like the Chinese festival very much, so I want to invite you to go with us. We will have many interesting things to do there, such as making dumplings and having some performances. I think you must like it. Making dumplings is exciting and we can do it together. So, join us, please. I am waiting for you.
We will go to the nursing house at 7:30 and go back at 5:00 in the evening.
Looking forward to your reply.
Yours,
X