Writing prompt: My Hometown

Student essay:
Hollo,everybody.Today I will introduce my hometown to you.
Myhometown is Qingdao.Qindgao is a very beautiful city in China.Qingdao is near the sea.And I always play in the sea.There is the subway in Qingdao.Qingdao give me a warm feeling.Qingdao is one of the most living cities I have ever seen.A lot of people from other cities say Qingdao is very beautiful.A I agree with them.In my impression of Qingdao environmental is more protection than before.So I wish Qingdao will be more beautiful.
This is my hometown.What about you?I want to listen to you.

Corrected essay:
Hello, everybody. Today I will introduce my hometown to you.
My hometown is Qingdao. Qingdao is a very beautiful city in China. Qingdao is near the sea. And I always play in the sea. There is a subway in Qingdao. Qingdao gives me a warm feeling. Qingdao is one of the most livable cities I have ever seen. A lot of people from other cities say Qingdao is very beautiful. And I agree with them. In my impression, Qingdao's environment is more protected than before. So I wish Qingdao will be more beautiful.
This is my hometown. What about you? I want to listen to you.