Writing prompt: My Life in the Future

Student essay:
In twenty years, I will be thirty-four years old. I think I will be a successful and happy person.
I will be a doctor then and will help more patients.
I will live in Beijing near my parents and I will visit them often. Every year, we will have a family trip together.
In my spare time, I will play computer games. I like sports, so I will also play tennis with my friends and go swimming at the swimming pool near my home.
I will enjoy my life a lot because I will spend my time how I want to. Life will be so exciting and comfortable.

Corrected essay:
In twenty years, I will be thirty-four years old. I think I will be a successful and happy person.
I will be a doctor then and will help more patients.
I will live in Beijing near my parents and I will visit them often. Every year, we will have a family trip together.
In my spare time, I will play computer games. I like sports, so I will also play tennis with my friends and go swimming at the swimming pool near my home.
I will enjoy my life a lot because I will spend my time how I want to. Life will be so exciting and comfortable.