Writing prompt: Should We Keep Animals in Zoos?

Student essay:
We had a discussion in our English lesson this week. The theme of the discussion is"Shall we keep animals in zoos? ".
In the discussion, 40%of us thought that we should keep animals in zoos so that we can see and know more about different animals. What's more, the animals in zoos are safe. They can be taken good care of in zoos.
The rest 60% students thought that it was much better to keep animals in the wild. Nature is animals' home. They prefer living in the wild to living in the cages. Animals can't have a free life and do what they like in the cages.
I think that animals shouldn't be kept in zoos. Living in zoos may change their living habits. Most importantly, living in the wild can exercise their living skills so that they can grow strong.
In order to keep animals alive, we should protect their home such as forests and prairies. Let's protect the natural environment together to save animals!

Corrected essay:
We had a discussion in our English lesson this week. The theme of the discussion is "Shall we keep animals in zoos?"
In the discussion, 40% of us thought that we should keep animals in zoos so that we can see and know more about different animals. What's more, the animals in zoos are safe. They can be taken good care of in zoos.
The rest 60% of students thought that it was much better to keep animals in the wild. Nature is animals' home. They prefer living in the wild to living in cages. Animals can't have a free life and do what they like in cages.
I think that animals shouldn't be kept in zoos. Living in zoos may change their living habits. Most importantly, living in the wild can exercise their living skills so that they can grow strong.
In order to keep animals alive, we should protect their homes such as forests and prairies. Let's protect the natural environment together to save animals!