Writing prompt: APEC Blue

Student essay:
APEC held,brought a 'miracle'--APEC blue.It refers to the blue sky during the APEC week. The sky was so clear and beautiful that many people have appealed to us to protect the environment, which can lead to the common APEC blue, not to be a 'miracle' any more.
To make this dream come true, many measures are needed to be taken. First of all, we should lead a low-carbon lifestyle, so take more public transport. Second, use something that can be reused many times more often. Last but not least, from now on, try to do little things as we can. The earth is our common mother, only if all of us try to save her, can she live better!

Corrected essay:
APEC was held, bringing a 'miracle'--APEC blue. It refers to the blue sky during the APEC week. The sky was so clear and beautiful that many people have appealed to us to protect the environment, which can lead to the common APEC blue not being a 'miracle' anymore.
To make this dream come true, many measures need to be taken. First of all, we should lead a low-carbon lifestyle, so take more public transport. Second, use something that can be reused many times more often. Last but not least, from now on, try to do as many little things as we can. The earth is our common mother. Only if all of us try to save her can she live better!