Writing prompt: My First Trip

Student essay:
I will never forget my first trip.When I was little,my father took me to a seaside in my hometown ZheJiang.There were many fishing boats and boxes about fish.And then we took the fishing boat to a small island.There was not any tree in the island,but I think it was very nice because it had many big birds called wild migratory goose!And there was a lot of rock so it's difficult to walk.
My family played with sand and rock and I moved the rock to find some beatifull insect.
We cook the fish and seafood by ourselves beacause there wasn't many people and restaurants.It's delicious!
I was very enjoy this trip and I am looking forward to going the small island again!

Corrected essay:
I will never forget my first trip. When I was little, my father took me to a seaside in my hometown Zhejiang. There were many fishing boats and boxes of fish. And then we took the fishing boat to a small island. There were not any trees in the island, but I thought it was very nice because it had many big birds called wild migratory geese! There were also a lot of rocks, so it was difficult to walk.
My family played with sand and rocks and I moved the rocks to find some beautiful insects.
We cooked the fish and seafood by ourselves because there weren't many people or restaurants. It was delicious! I really enjoyed this trip and I was looking forward to going to the small island again!