Writing prompt: Spring Festival

Student essay:
Dear Jone ,
Do you known which is the most important festival in my country ?Great !It's the Spring Festival ,of course .Now ,we are looking forward to having our festival .I guess you must be interested in this festival so let me tell you something about it .
As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck .when it coming ,people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends.we eat dumpling and many kind of food together .then most of the people visit their neighbors, friends,families .at midnight we set off fireworks which can bring us happiness and good luck .
now ,I hope you have some idea if Chinese Spring Festival.
best wishes
yours,zhang peng

Corrected essay:
Dear Jone,
Do you know which is the most important festival in my country? Great! It's the Spring Festival, of course. Now, we are looking forward to having our festival. I guess you must be interested in this festival, so let me tell you something about it.
As you know, the Spring Festival is a traditional festival which has existed for thousands of years. It's important for Chinese people to get together to celebrate the festival. People prepare a lot for it before its coming. We clean our house, which we think can bring us good luck. When it is coming, people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends. We eat dumplings and many kinds of food together. Then most people visit their neighbors, friends and families. At midnight, we set off fireworks, which can bring us happiness and good luck.
Now, I hope you have some idea of the Chinese Spring Festival.
Best wishes,
Yours, Zhang Peng