Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
Dear Dad and Mom,
I'm writing a letter to you and I want to tell you something about what I have seen and what I feel.
Every day,I learn and communicate with my Chinese friends and we join in sport activities together.In this journey,I have visited places of interest in Beijing and watched Peking Operas.I have eaten Chinese traditional food which is so delicious that I cannot forget its taste forever.I also knew about some Chinese history.I enjoyed my first Spring Festival during the toor ,too.I love dumplings a lot.
I like the life here very much.I hope that I can stay here for a long time.
Yours Vickey

Corrected essay:
Dear Dad and Mom,
I'm writing a letter to you and I want to tell you something about what I have seen and what I feel.
Every day, I learn and communicate with my Chinese friends and we join in sports activities together. In this journey, I have visited places of interest in Beijing and watched Peking Operas. I have eaten Chinese traditional food which is so delicious that I cannot forget its taste forever. I also knew about some Chinese history. I enjoyed my first Spring Festival during the tour, too. I love dumplings a lot.
I like the life here very much. I hope that I can stay here for a long time.
Yours,
Vickey