Writing prompt: Should We Keep Animals in Zoos?

Student essay:
Yesterday,our class started a discussion about whether animals should be kept in zoos.And I will tell you the results we discussed yesterday.
Forty percent of students thought that we should keep animals in zoos.On the one hand,they thought that people can see a great variety of animals.On the other hand,animals can be taken good care of by keepers in zoos.And sixty percent of students didn't agree with them.I think they thought the animals are the members of the nature so they may like to live in the wild.And if they are kept in cages they will not only lose their freedom but also difficult to move.
I support the second view.Because,the animals just like human,all of us may have our own life,and every life should have its own freedom.Otherwise,they will not become happiler and happiler.
How to protect the animals?Please stop killing and eating animals.Let's protect the animals now.

Corrected essay:
Yesterday, our class started a discussion about whether animals should be kept in zoos. And I will tell you the results we discussed yesterday.
Forty percent of students thought that we should keep animals in zoos. On the one hand, they thought that people could see a great variety of animals. On the other hand, animals can be taken good care of by keepers in zoos. And sixty percent of students didn't agree with them. I think they thought animals are members of nature so they may like to live in the wild. And if they are kept in cages they will not only lose their freedom but also find it difficult to move.
I support the second view because animals, just like humans, all have their own life, and every life should have its own freedom. Otherwise, they will not become happier and happier.
How can we protect the animals? Please stop killing and eating animals. Let's protect the animals now.