Writing prompt: Daming's Holiday Plan

Student essay:
Now,let me introduce daming's holiday plan:
8:30 get up and then wash face and brush teeth.
8:45 have healthy breakfast.
9:00--10:30 do his homework carefully.
10:30--11:30 go to the park and do exercise.
12:00 have a delicious lunch.
13:00--15:00 have computer class or English class.
16:00--18:00 read many kinds of books.
18:00 have a little supper.
19:00--20:00 search for the information on the internet or watch his favourite TV programme.
20:30--21:00 put away his things.
21:30 go to sleep.
I think his holiday plan is fine, but I think spend more time on study is much better.

Corrected essay:
Now, let me introduce Daming's holiday plan:
8:30 get up and then wash his face and brush his teeth.
8:45 have a healthy breakfast.
9:00--10:30 do his homework carefully.
10:30--11:30 go to the park and do exercise.
12:00 have a delicious lunch.
13:00--15:00 have a computer class or English class.
16:00--18:00 read many kinds of books.
18:00 have a little supper.
19:00--20:00 search for information on the internet or watch his favourite TV programme.
20:30--21:00 put away his things.
21:30 go to sleep.
I think his holiday plan is fine, but I think spending more time on study is much better.