Writing prompt: My Favorite Place at School

Student essay:
Our school has a lot of places,and students like to hang out, such as playground, computer rooms,art room etc. The classroom is one of the best places in school,because it makes me joyful.
The classroom is not only bright but also big. And there are many desks, they make the it spacious and clear. I can always hear the pup when the students are attending class. In such an environment,we can learn by heart that I'm fond of learning in it. I like classroom learning environment like it brings to me. It makes me realise that study is useful for achievement in the classroom. I like learning books, because it not only provides helping me learn a lot of what is happening around the history, but also I feel very happy.
Although our classroom isn't gorgeous but I still love it,because classroom brings me and others laugh. It is too hard to forget this place,because it gave me a lot of memories. So of all the places in the school,the classroom is my favorite place.

Corrected essay:
Our school has a lot of places where students like to hang out, such as the playground, computer rooms, art rooms, etc. The classroom is one of the best places in school because it makes me joyful.
The classroom is not only bright but also big. And there are many desks; the classroom is spacious and clear. I can always hear the pupils when they are attending classes. In such an environment, we can learn by heart, and I'm fond of learning in it. I like the learning environment of the classroom, and I like what it brings to me. It makes me realise that studying in the classroom is useful for achievement. I like reading books because it not only helps me learn a lot about what is happening in history, but also makes me feel very happy.
 Although our classroom isn't gorgeous, I still love it because the classroom brings me and others laughter. It is too hard to forget this place because it gave me a lot of memories. So, of all the places in the school, the classroom is my favorite place.