Writing prompt: Keep Healthy

Student essay:
In my opinion, I think more and more children who are very young get fat due to less exercise. Also, these children might eat too much sweet lead to their weight get larger and larger. So it's very important for children to have a good diet to keep healthy.\nHowever, how can we keep fit? Here is my advice. First, the most important thing is that we need to take more exercises. Second, what is also very necessary is that we are supposed to have a good diet. It's very good for us to eat more fruit and vegetables after meals.\nIf we want to keep healthy, we will try our best to carry out our plans and follow the advice so that our body will get stronger and stronger.

Corrected essay:
In my opinion, I think more and more children who are very young get fat due to less exercise. Also, these children might eat too much sweet food, which leads to their weight getting larger and larger. So it's very important for children to have a good diet to keep healthy.
However, how can we keep fit? Here is my advice. First, the most important thing is that we need to take more exercise. Second, what is also very necessary is that we are supposed to have a good diet. It's very good for us to eat more fruit and vegetables after meals.
If we want to keep healthy, we will try our best to carry out our plans and follow the advice so that our body will get stronger and stronger.