Writing prompt: My Holiday

Student essay:
I am from Chinese family.My family is very friendly.In holiday we go to visit our relatives.We made dumplings on New Year's Eve.we go to the take part in the winter camp.I know a little frends.we were get along with frends but Holidays are short . We treasure our friendship..In this holiday is Live very happilyhave a good timeenjoy yourself. I learned a lot in this winter holiday.My winter vacation has once more ended happily in this way.
I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously,because I had done so many meaningful things,moreover,I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently,this would make my life even more colourful and full of variety.

Corrected essay:
I am from a Chinese family. My family is very friendly. During the holiday, we visited our relatives. We made dumplings on New Year's Eve. We took part in the winter camp. I met a few friends, and we got along well with friends, but the holidays are short. We treasure our friendship. During this holiday, I lived very happily, had a good time and enjoyed myself. I learned a lot during this winter holiday. My winter vacation once again ended happily in this way.
I really did enjoy this vacation tremendously, because I had done so many meaningful things. Moreover, I have come to understand that one should help others willingly and frequently. This would make our life even more colourful and full of variety.