Writing prompt: Being a Good Listener

Student essay:
I think it is important for us to listen to others. When we listen to others, we show respect to others. Litening can help us understand each other better and make better relationship because when we are listened to, we may feel a sense of satisfaction that we are of significance to others.
When parents listen to their children, they may enter their children's own world. It helps them short the distance in their children's mind. Thoughout listening, many problems can be solved.
When teachers become good listeners to their students, they can know students in a better way. At the same time, student's own needs can be met.
When students listen to each other, their friendship can be better developed. Then can help each other in lessons. Then they will make progress together.
When listening, we should not only concentrate on speaker's words, but also their voice, behaviors. . . We need to look at speakers to show our respect.
Thank you!

Corrected essay:
I think it is important for us to listen to others. When we listen to others, we show respect to others. Listening can help us understand each other better and build better relationships because when we are listened to, we may feel a sense of satisfaction that we are of significance to others.
When parents listen to their children, they may enter their children's own world. It helps them shorten the distance in their children's minds. Through listening, many problems can be solved.
When teachers become good listeners to their students, they can know students in a better way. At the same time, students' own needs can be met.
When students listen to each other, their friendship can be better developed. They can help each other in lessons. Then they will make progress together.
When listening, we should not only concentrate on the speaker's words, but also their voice and behaviors. We need to look at speakers to show our respect.
Thank you!