Writing prompt: Giving Advice

Student essay:
Dear Wang Li,
I am glad to hear that you are learning English. English is difficult. I will give you some advice to help you memorize English words.
First of all,I suggest you write down four words and pronounce it when you see it. What's more, it's a good idea to learn English songs because it is a good way to learn new words.Try to remember those new words what can help you in your composition.Finally,how about remembering the spelling rules? They can help you to remember English words quickly and better.
In a word, I hope you will learn English better!

Corrected essay:
Dear Wang Li,
I am glad to hear that you are learning English. English is difficult. I will give you some advice to help you memorize English words.
First of all, I suggest you write down four words and pronounce them when you see them. What's more, it's a good idea to learn English songs because it is a good way to learn new words. Try to remember those new words that can help you in your composition. Finally, how about remembering the spelling rules? They can help you to remember English words quickly and better.
In a word, I hope you will learn English better!