Writing prompt: Should We Keep Animals in Zoos?

Student essay:
We shouldn't keep animals in zoos. Freedom is the most important thing for human beings or animals. All the people don't like the life of a small space, even the animals.
Animals like living in the wild because they can enjoy the natural life. They can go anywhere they want or do anything they like. Without any rules on them, they live more happier. But if they are put in a cage, the life of them will be more different.
It's cruel for humans to make animals keep off a free life. They also need freedom. But the life in the wild is so dangerous that we should do something for them. People should stop hunting or polluting the forest to protect the animals. Let's try our best to help them.

Corrected essay:
We shouldn't keep animals in zoos. Freedom is the most important thing for human beings or animals. None of the people like living in a small space, and neither do the animals.
Animals like living in the wild because they can enjoy the natural life. They can go anywhere they want or do anything they like. Without any rules on them, they live happier. But if they are put in a cage, the life of them will be very different.
It's cruel for humans to make animals give up a free life. They also need freedom. But life in the wild is so dangerous that we should do something for them. People should stop hunting or polluting the forest to protect the animals. Let's try our best to help them.