Writing prompt: The Voice of China

Student essay:
Recently,a really talent show,The Voice of China, appeals to a large number of TV audiences.There'no doubt that The Voice of China has been the most popular talent show in this summer.
In this talent show, the judges do not appreciate the singer's performance face to face.Once they have heard the voice which touched them,they will press the button.No sooner have they pressed the button than the chairs turn around,which means the singer gets the opportunity to be their pupil.Particularly,if more than one judge turns around,the participant has the right to make the final decision.
As far as I'm concerned,the reason why The Voice of China gains popularity among the TV audiences is that the show has given people positive energy.As a faithful audience of The Voice of China,I have learned from this show that we should dare to chase our dreams.Anyway,it has brought satisfaction and positive energy to our life.

Corrected essay:
Recently, a real talent show, The Voice of China, has appealed to a large number of TV audiences. There's no doubt that The Voice of China has been the most popular talent show this summer.
In this talent show, the judges do not appreciate the singer's performance face to face. Once they hear a voice that touches them, they press the button. No sooner have they pressed the button than the chairs turn around, which means the singer gets the opportunity to be their pupil. Particularly, if more than one judge turns around, the participant has the right to make the final decision.
As far as I'm concerned, the reason why The Voice of China has gained popularity among TV audiences is that the show has given people positive energy. As a faithful audience of The Voice of China, I have learned from this show that we should dare to chase our dreams. Anyway, it has brought satisfaction and positive energy to our life.