Writing prompt: My First Trip

Student essay:
According to my mother my first trip was went to Beijing when I'm five years old. I think that I can remember my first travel was in 2010 .I'm went to world expo in shanghai with my mother.we go there by air, we get on the plane in morning and we landing on the shanghaipudong airport at night. We have dinner in the hotel , but many food are sweet and I think it was not good. Tomorrow morning we visited to the UK exhibition room, Spain exhibition room china exhibition room and many other place in shanghai, there were so many people in the line ,we waited about two hour only in one exhibition room. I'm so tired in this travel but I think I have a good trip .

Corrected essay:
According to my mother my first trip was to Beijing when I was five years old. I think that I can remember my first travel in 2010. I went to the World Expo in Shanghai with my mother. We went there by air. We got on the plane in the morning and we landed on the Shanghai Pudong Airport at night. We had dinner in the hotel, but much of the food was sweet and I thought it was not good. The next morning we visited the UK exhibition room, the Spain exhibition room, the China exhibition room and many other places in Shanghai. There were so many people in line. We waited about two hours for just one exhibition room. I was so tired during this trip but I think I had a good trip.