Writing prompt: Film or Book, Which Do You Prefer?

Student essay:
Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful. In my opinion, I think read the original work it's the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing, by the way, if you prefer watching movies, maybe you will miss many interesting contants in the original work.

Corrected essay:
Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Games and The Lord of the Rings. It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work. However, if we read the original work, we can get more details, and the words in the books are graceful. In my opinion, reading the original work is the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing. By the way, if you prefer watching movies, you might miss many interesting details in the original work.