Writing prompt: My Favorite Traditional Chinese Festival

Student essay:
I want to talk about my favorite festival today. My favorite Chinese festival is Spring Festival.
It's celebrated in January in the lunar calendar. It's Chinese new year. Spring Festival is the most important festival in China.
During this festival,people in China get together and have a big meal. In many places people like to set off firecrackers and fireworks to celebrate it. And dumplings are the most traditional food during the festival.
It is my favorite festival because I don't have to go to school,and I can get some new clothes,eat a lot of delicious food,and get some red envelopes,too. Children like the festival very much,because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes. They can also get some money from their parents. This money is given to children for good luck.
It makes me feel very exciting,and happy,of course.
People put New Year scrolls on the wall for good fortune. The Spring Festival lasts about 15 days long. People visit relatives and friends with the words "Have all your wishes ". People enjoy the Spring Festival,during this time they can have a good rest.
What is your favorite festival? Tell me about it!
Best wishes for you!

Corrected essay:
I want to talk about my favorite festival today. My favorite Chinese festival is the Spring Festival.
It's celebrated in January in the lunar calendar. It's Chinese New Year. The Spring Festival is the most important festival in China.
During this festival, people in China get together and have a big meal. In many places people like to set off firecrackers and fireworks to celebrate it. And dumplings are the most traditional food during the festival.
It is my favorite festival because I don't have to go to school, and I can get some new clothes, eat a lot of delicious food and get some red envelopes, too. Children like the festival very much because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes. They can also get some money from their parents. This money is given to children for good luck.
It makes me feel very excited and happy, of course.
People put New Year scrolls on the wall for good fortune. The Spring Festival lasts about 15 days. People visit relatives and friends with the words "Have all your wishes." People enjoy the Spring Festival, and during this time they can have a good rest.
What is your favorite festival? Tell me about it!
Best wishes for you!