Writing prompt: Based on the given hints and referring to the picture, write a short essay.
Last Sunday, I went for a picnic in the park with my friends. It started raining in the afternoon. I forgot my umbrella and got wet. I felt cold and had a headache. My friends took me to the hospital. The doctor said I had a fever. He gave me some medicine and told me to go home and rest well.
Writing hints: picnic; rain; umbrella; get wet; hospital; fever; medicine.

Student essay:
last week, I went to picnic in park with my friends. Start to afternoon the weather was raining, I wasn't remember to get umbrella so I got wet. I felt very cold and headache. My friends bring me to hospital, doctor say: " You are fever, you wait for me a minute, I need give you some medicines. " Then he tell me: " You must pay attention to your body! "

Corrected essay:
Last week, I went to picnic in the park with my friends. In the afternoon, it started to rain, but I hadn't remembered to bring an umbrella, so I got wet. I felt very cold and had a headache. My friends brought me to the hospital, and the doctor said, "You have a fever. You wait for me a minute. I need to give you some medicine." Then he told me, "You must pay attention to your body!"