Writing prompt: Assume you are Emily. Below is your family photo. Please introduce your family members based on the picture. Requirement: Write at least 6 sentences.

Student essay:
Hello, everyone! I'll show you my family's photo. The tall man is my father! He is tall and thin . He is a good man. He is 36 years old. He likes clean. This is my mother. She is 37 years old. She is very beautiful. She has short hair. The happy boy is my brother. He likes spot. He is 14 years old. I am happy , too. I have good family.

Corrected essay:
Hello, everyone! I'll show you my family's photo. The tall man is my father! He is tall and thin. He is a good man. He is 36 years old. He likes cleanliness. This is my mother. She is 37 years old. She is very beautiful. She has short hair. The happy boy is my brother. He likes sports. He is 14 years old. I am happy, too. I have a good family.