Writing prompt: Assume you are Emily. Below is your family photo. Please introduce your family members based on the picture. Requirement: Write at least 6 sentences.

Student essay:
I'm Emily. I'm a ten-year-old girl. This is a photo of my family. This is my father. His name is steve. He is a teacher man of 42 years old. This is my moher Mayra. She's a nurse. She's kind and elegant. The boy is my brother Paul. He's 16 years old and he likes playing football. He's very interesting. Who is the girl in the picture? It's me.

Corrected essay:
I'm Emily. I'm a ten-year-old girl. This is a photo of my family. This is my father. His name is Steve. He is a teacher of 42 years old. This is my mother Mayra. She's a nurse. She's kind and elegant. The boy is my brother Paul. He's 16 years old and he likes playing football. He's very interesting. Who is the girl in the picture? It's me.