Writing prompt: Assume you are Emily. Below is your family photo. Please introduce your family members based on the picture. Requirement: Write at least 6 sentences.

Student essay:
Hi ! I'm Emily. This is my family. He is my Dad, he works in hotel and he is handsome. Next she is my Mum. She is a gymnast, she is beautiful. Then this is my sister, she is a schoolchild. She likes danceing. Finally he is my borther. He likes sport. He will is a sportman.

Corrected essay:
Hi! I'm Emily. This is my family. He is my Dad. He works in a hotel and he is handsome. Next is my Mum. She is a gymnast. She is beautiful. Then this is my sister. She is a schoolchild. She likes dancing. Finally, this is my brother. He likes sports. He will be a sportsman.