Herbert - You've probably caught all these yourself. Some
of them you may not agree to. Anyway, here they are.

NOTES

Friday, November 21.

Scene 1

1. Come a-raddle - The two singers ought to agree on the pitch, or we can't hear the words. We ought to hear also "How's that, cowboy?" and in the end Curly's "How's that, farmer?"

2. Aunt Eller - good humor in opening scene.

3. Curly - In line, "you're old. My, you're old", he pauses too long and breaks the line rhythm before the *My*.

4. Curly - no flow, end of beat not seen.

5. The Curly-Aunt Eller good-natured jeering beat reaches its peak at Aunt Eller's triumphant "You better sing me a song then, like I told you to in the first place!"

6. Jim leaves out lines.

7. Aunt Eller and Laurey's pronunciations not right.

8. Curly - the carriage building scene is too slow.

9. Aunt Eller - Line should be "XXXXXX Why don't you grab her and kiss her,--" etc. not "catch her and kiss her," etc.

10. Curly ought to make something out of "Onct I break 'em they' be purty apt to stay broke fer a fact. You c'n count on a horse." (as opposed to a woman like Laurey. In the last scene, he says to her, "I'm countin' on you, Laurey."

11. Curly should be rather sober after Laurey flies out at him with her "wish 't he had a sweetheart bum" until Aunt Eller reminds him of breaking the broncs. Then he brightens.

12. Jim pronounces *Laurey* - XXXXXXX as if it were *lurry*.

13. Jim says "Morever --" instead of *moreover*.

14. Would it help Aunt Eller's line - "A thousand pins it takes 'em to dress" if she put a disgusted "These girls!" in front of it. ?

15. Curly - *Green Grow the Lilacs* - the break Jim makes after the kidding stanza to Aunt Eller is awkward and destroys the glamorous flow of the song. I think it's because he awkwardly backs up and hunts his chair again with his posterior, instead

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30. Ado Annie pronounces fellers incorrectly - It sounds satiric and sophisticated the way she does it.

31. Ado Laurey's "Why, my goodness - I'd just love to have you - "etc. should begin a much higher fever of delight.

32. Laurey - Lower register for her Alaska story to Ado Annie. And more confidential.

33. Laurey accents wrong word - in "Mercy, what does he do to you?" (Miss Coburn accents does)

34. Aunt Eller's "Don't you call me Aunt Eller, you little waltz - " etc. should be bigger, more outraged.

35. Interlude - Beginning of girls' song - Beat the Drums - seemed uninteresting, I don't know why.

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36. Curly's Green Grow not timed the same.

37. Curly's long speech beginning "That's a good strong rafter you got there" very shaky today.

38. His "Folks ad all gether round and sing. " etc. should follow, as if Jeeter had not interrupted.

39. "My name's Curly" speech bad.

40. "Den Patch -" So ethin is wrong about Jeeter's changed attitude on his response. Change should come on the next speech - duce: "Yer eyes don't lie to you."

41. Why do Curly and Jeeter change sides to play pitch?

42. Curly - seems too vehement and meaningful on the first "Darn yer eyes" of Sam Hall. Jeeter wouldn't stand for it, would he?

43. Jeeter's first long story bad. Something wrong about voice. Should have something ominous about Jeeter's predilections and interests.

44. Herbert - a strange lighting of the mm smoke house would do wonders for the scene, I think. Imp- ext for mood, don't you think?

45. Should be more quiet tensity in Jim after throwing door open. And, for that matter, though his manner is casual and unconcerned on top all through the smoke house scene, hadn't we ought to feel his wariness and tensity.?