that's absander's prose condensed by me into the draft i proposed above i'm a little confused by what happened here i posted a draft for comments so that editors could come to consensus on it before putting it in the main article space you commented on it i made changes based on your comments and i posted the result to the main article space it turned out you had a lot of additional corrections and concerns and i disagree with some of your edits so far the section as it stands now has a number of new problems grammar level of detail warning tags etc it actually looks like the best idea would be to move the whole section back to the talk page and discuss it more thoroughly does that sound like a good idea