there's a lot to learn when you first start editing wikipedia and it can be overwhelming to try to learn it all at once it may be good to look at some high quality artistic biographies on wikipedia such as bronwyn bancroft or dave stamper to see how those articles do things i've cleaned up your draft a lot if you click view history on the page you can see the various changes that i made for instance with this edit i added several wikilinks with this edit i created an introductory sentence so the reader can know instantly who she is and why she is important this next edit is very important in it i changed the references to use tags so that individual statements are sourced notice how the first time i cite a source i use the format url com when i later want to use the same reference i only use the format if you add more statements from these or other sources you can reference them in the same way i made several other changes which you can view in the history i'm sure you'll want to add more information from these two references and maybe from other references as well but it should only need another sentence or two before you move it into article space at anneliese von oettingen i can help with that too if you like all the best talk p s you can just reply here rather than my talk page since i'll be watching this page