i think the article reads pretty well the quotes far from being 'turgid' are essential for explaining it's a real relief to read a wiki entry that actually quotes the subject and his critics rather than trying to ineptly summarise them you're right there are a few repetitions but the 'controversy' section certainly is of interest indeed i notice the daily telegraph quoted it in full on saturday suggesting it is of interest to their million or so readers a criticism section would be welcome i'm not sure what you mean by the practices integrity section since as the sourcewatch entry on hari shows they contradict each other e g littlejohn accused him of being on drugs on his show private eye accused him of pretending to have taken drugs when he hasn't they seem like a contradictory jumble of accusations none of which come from credible sources if you are looking for wiki entries that need tidying up i can think of hundreds that need it urgently however if you proceed i will look forward to sparring with you on it