finally i only changed the second 'paris economy' reference to 'industry in the paris region' the first 'paris economy' is fine as it is widely understood as such but the second reference i changed to a eliminate repetition and b give the layman reader a cocluding scope of the area we're talking about paris on a map extends only as far as paris and we're talking larger than that here trust me it is details like this that make the difference between a widely comprehensive article and one targeted to those already familiar with its subject matter