in broad strokes this looks like the right kind of outline for a biography be sure to take a look at some other scientist biography articles to see how the very beginning of article is expected to look the entire lead section should be a concise summary of the article while the begging of the lead section is an even more concise summary highlighting the most important things you'd want a reader to know if they were going to stop after one paragraph and the first sentence can be thought of almost like a dictionary definition of the topic of the article there must be a mistake in either the date of death or the date he took over as editor of physiological zoology