it is not at all hard to read and the lede is elegant and excellent it may not suit your taste though and bmk's lies are a personal attack i will defend myself as for collegiality if bmk's behavior is an example of what you regard as collegiality then you don't understand what that word means if you or he has a problem with the article i strongly suggest you offer your ideas one at a time for discussion in order to reach a consensus before making changes that's my idea of collegiality