wait i just re read your entire post i think the exclusion you're talking about is in my talk page post not the draft i posted what i meant to ask was what are examples of things you object to in my draft open question for anyone reading thisi'm not sold on my draft as the best version possible actually i think a couple parts could flow a bit better toward the end of sections this was kinda a tricky article to write note that i've pinged the editors whose names i see on this discussion page for feedback