Writing prompt: Reflections on Watching Paddington Bear

Student essay:
PADDINGTOM is a film. It revolves around a young bear, the cubs at London's Paddington station get lost, and then adopted by a good family.
First, in the film Paddingtom says"In London, everyone is different, but that means anyone can fit in. "is my most moving. Everyone is different. So we must do the best we can be. Will do our best and never give up. I will never be the same as others.
Second, the film also tells me a truth that personal and animals can live in peace. Paddingtom can be moved by Mr Brown to get rid of it.
Last but not least, we should care for animals, protect animals. It is the sacred duty of our human beings to cherish the life of animals and to treat the animals in friendship. The more animals we have, the more friends we have. As long as we live in this beautiful earth, the earth will become more colorful, full of vigor and vitality. As long as people and animals are friendly, our world is perfect and happy.

Corrected essay:
PADDINGTON is a film. It revolves around a young bear who gets lost at London's Paddington station, and is then adopted by a good family.
First, in the film Paddington says, "In London, everyone is different, but that means anyone can fit in." This is my most moving moment. Everyone is different. So we must do the best we can. We will do our best and never give up. I will never be the same as others.
Second, the film also tells me a truth that people and animals can live in peace. Paddington can be moved by Mr Brown to get rid of it.
Last but not least, we should care for animals and protect animals. It is the sacred duty of human beings to cherish the lives of animals and to treat the animals with friendship. The more animals we have, the more friends we have. As long as we live on this beautiful earth, the earth will become more colorful, and full of vigor and vitality. As long as people and animals are friendly, our world will be perfect and happy.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: PADDINGTOM is a film.
correct_sentence: PADDINGTON is a film.
error: PADDINGTOM
correction: PADDINGTON
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the official spelling of the movie title, 〈PADDINGTOM〉 is misspelled; the correct name should be 『Paddington』 (capitalized first letter, lowercase for the rest), translated as “Paddington Bear,” which is the standardized naming form for the main character, the little bear.

error_sentence: It revolves around a young bear, the cubs at London's Paddington station get lost, and then adopted by a good family.

correct_sentence: It revolves around a young bear who gets lost at London's Paddington station, and is then adopted by a good family.

error: , the cubs
correction: who gets lost
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Relative Word Error: The original sentence uses a comma to connect two independent main clauses, violating English compound sentence rules. According to relative clause grammar, it should be changed to use the relative pronoun 『who』 to introduce a clause modifying 〈bear〉, forming a main-subordinate structure; ② Noun Error: The original sentence mentions 〈the cubs〉, but in the movie, Paddington is an independent character and is not described as a group of cubs. Based on the plot facts, this inaccurate description is deleted; ③ Sentence Structure Error: The relative clause introduced by the relative pronoun 『who』 lacks a predicate verb, leading to a semantic break. According to the plot, the predicate 『gets lost』 is added to form the complete clause 『who gets lost』, clearly expressing the core plot of “getting lost”.

error_sentence: It revolves around a young bear, the cubs at London's Paddington station get lost, and then adopted by a good family.

correct_sentence: It revolves around a young bear who gets lost at London's Paddington station, and is then adopted by a good family.

error: get lost, and
correction: , and is
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: Since 『gets lost』 has already appeared as the predicate of the clause, the repetition of 〈and gets lost〉 at the end of the sentence causes semantic redundancy. According to the principle of English conciseness, this redundant phrase is deleted; ② Verb Voice Error: The verb 〈adopted〉 needs to be paired with an auxiliary verb to form the passive voice. According to grammatical rules, 『is』 is added to form 『is adopted by』, correctly expressing the passive meaning of “being adopted”.

error_sentence: First, in the film Paddingtom says"In London, everyone is different, but that means anyone can fit in.
correct_sentence: First, in the film Paddington says, "In London, everyone is different, but that means anyone can fit in."
error: Paddingtom says"In
correction: Paddington says, "In
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: The recurring misspelling of 〈Paddingtom〉 should be uniformly corrected to the official name 『Paddington』, translated as “Paddington Bear,” ensuring consistency of proper nouns throughout the text; ② Punctuation Error: English grammar rules require a comma to separate the reporting verb from direct speech. The original sentence is missing a comma after 〈says〉; it should be added as 『says, "In..."』 to comply with punctuation standards; Space Error: According to English typesetting rules, a space should be preserved before the left quotation mark (between the reporting verb and the quotation mark). The original sentence did not preserve the space; it is corrected to the standard format 『says, "In..."』.

error_sentence: "is my most moving.
correct_sentence: This is my most moving moment.
correction: This
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence lacks a subject, resulting in an incomplete structure. According to basic English sentence patterns, the demonstrative pronoun 『This』 is added as the subject to form a complete subject-verb-complement structure 『This is my most moving moment』, making the sentence components complete.

error_sentence: "is my most moving.
correct_sentence: This is my most moving moment.
correction: moment
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: The adjective 〈moving〉 must modify a noun; the original sentence lacks a headword, leading to semantic ambiguity. According to noun phrase construction rules, 『moment』 is added to form 『moving moment』, clearly expressing the complete concept of “moving moment”.

error_sentence: So we must do the best we can be. Will do our best and never give up.
correct_sentence: So we must do the best we can. We will do our best and never give up.
error: be. Will
correction: . We will
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: The 〈be〉 in the phrase 〈can be〉 conflicts with the subsequent verb 〈do〉. According to English idiomatic expression norms, the redundant 〈be〉 is deleted and corrected to 『do the best we can』, conforming to fixed phrase usage; ② Pronoun Error: The original sentence 〈Will do our best〉 lacks a subject, not conforming to declarative sentence grammatical structure. According to the principle of subject-verb agreement, the subject 『We』 is added and capitalization is corrected to 『We will do our best』, forming a complete subject-verb structure; ③ Case Error: The modal verb 〈Will〉 in the sentence should not be capitalized. According to English capitalization rules, it is changed to lowercase 『will』 (unless at the beginning of a sentence).

error_sentence: Second, the film also tells me a truth that personal and animals can live in peace.
correct_sentence: Second, the film also tells me a truth that people and animals can live in peace.
error: personal
correction: people
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: The adjective 〈personal〉 cannot be juxtaposed with the noun 〈animals〉. According to semantic logic, it is changed to the noun 『people』, forming the correct parallel structure 『people and animals』.

error_sentence: Paddingtom can be moved by Mr Brown to get rid of it.

correct_sentence: Paddington can be moved by Mr Brown to get rid of it.

error: Paddingtom
correction: Paddington
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the official spelling of the movie title, 〈Paddingtom〉 is misspelled; the correct name should be 『Paddington』 (capitalized first letter, lowercase for the rest), translated as “Paddington Bear,” which is the standardized naming form for the main character, the little bear.

error_sentence: Last but not least, we should care for animals, protect animals.
correct_sentence: Last but not least, we should care for animals and protect animals.
error: ,
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The two verb phrases 〈care for animals〉 and 〈protect animals〉 are connected only by a comma, violating English parallel structure rules. According to the usage norms for coordinating conjunctions, 『and』 is added to connect them, changing it to 『care for and protect animals』.

error_sentence: It is the sacred duty of our human beings to cherish the life of animals and to treat the animals in friendship.
correct_sentence: It is the sacred duty of human beings to cherish the lives of animals and to treat the animals with friendship.
error: our
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar norms, “human beings” itself already refers to all humankind and, like “we,” has a group self-referential nature; conventional usage does not attach a possessive pronoun, so 〈our〉 should be deleted.

error_sentence: It is the sacred duty of our human beings to cherish the life of animals and to treat the animals in friendship.
correct_sentence: It is the sacred duty of human beings to cherish the lives of animals and to treat the animals with friendship.
error: life
correction: lives
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: The “life” corresponding to the plural noun 〈animals〉 needs to maintain number agreement. According to the English principle of grammatical agreement, the singular 〈life〉 is changed to the plural 『lives』, forming the correct collocation 『the lives of animals』.

error_sentence: It is the sacred duty of our human beings to cherish the life of animals and to treat the animals in friendship.
correct_sentence: It is the sacred duty of human beings to cherish the lives of animals and to treat the animals with friendship.
error: in
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The preposition in the fixed phrase 〈treat...in friendship〉 is used incorrectly. According to English idiomatic usage, to express “treat in...manner,” 『with』 should be used, corrected to 『treat the animals with friendship』.

error_sentence: As long as we live in this beautiful earth, the earth will become more colorful, full of vigor and vitality.
correct_sentence: As long as we live on this beautiful earth, the earth will become more colorful, and full of vigor and vitality.
error: in
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: When expressing “living on Earth,” 〈in〉 is used for enclosed spaces, while the surface of a planet requires 『on』. According to the rules for using spatial prepositions, it is changed to 『live on the earth』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: As long as we live in this beautiful earth, the earth will become more colorful, full of vigor and vitality.
correct_sentence: As long as we live on this beautiful earth, the earth will become more colorful, and full of vigor and vitality.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The adjective phrase 〈full of vigor〉 is in a parallel relationship with the preceding adjective 〈colorful〉; the original sentence lacks a conjunction. According to English parallel structure rules, 『and』 is added to form the complete parallel structure 『colorful and full of vigor』.

error_sentence: As long as people and animals are friendly, our world is perfect and happy.
correct_sentence: As long as people and animals are friendly, our world will be perfect and happy.
error: is
correction: will be
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: In a conditional adverbial clause introduced by 〈As long as...〉, the main clause needs to use the future tense to express an inevitable result. According to the tense rules for conditional sentences, the simple present tense 〈is〉 is changed to 『will be』, forming the correct tense collocation 『our world will be』.