Writing prompt: The Population Problem

Student essay:
Most of peopie know that China has the largest population of thw world .Everyone who lives in China thinks that the heavy traffic is nomal.But do you konw that?The large population has caused a lot of problems,not only in China,but also in many other countries.
In many places there is little food,water or the energy.People who live in these places have a hard life.Besides the traffic problem that we have mentioned,there is not much enough room for us to live in.Millions of people can't go home to go over the night everyday.One of the reasons is that it's too difficult to get a job.
Because of the large populaition,the pollution in the earth has become more and more serious.We should stop ourselves from doing something harmful to the environment,too .
Although the large population has coused these problems,I think if we unity as one ,the sight of the future will be beautiful!

Corrected essay:
Most people know that China has the largest population in the world. Everyone who lives in China thinks that the heavy traffic is normal. But do you know that the large population has caused a lot of problems, not only in China, but also in many other countries?
In many places there is little food, water or energy. People who live in these places have a hard life. Besides the traffic problem that we have mentioned, there is not enough room for us to live in. Millions of people can't go home to stay overnight every day. One of the reasons is that it's too difficult to get a job.
Because of the large population, the pollution in the earth has become more and more serious. We should stop ourselves from doing something harmful to the environment, too.
Although the large population has caused these problems, I think if we unite as one, the sight of the future will be beautiful!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Most of peopie know that China has the largest population of thw world .Everyone
correct_sentence: Most people know that China has the largest population in the world.
error: of peopie
correction: people
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 〈of〉 is not needed after 〈Most〉, so deleting the preposition 〈of〉 makes the sentence clear; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'people', so 〈peopie〉 is a misspelling of 『people』, and 〈peopie〉 needs to be changed to 『people』 to make the sentence semantically correct.

error_sentence: Most of peopie know that China has the largest population of thw world .Everyone
correct_sentence: Most people know that China has the largest population in the world. Everyone who lives in China thinks that the heavy traffic is normal.
error: of thw world .Everyone
correction: in the world. Everyone
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the intention here is to express 'the largest population in the world', so 『in the world』 should be used instead of 〈of the world〉; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that 〈thw〉 is a misspelling of 『the』, and 〈thw〉 needs to be changed to 『the』 to make the sentence semantically correct.

error_sentence: who lives in China thinks that the heavy traffic is nomal.
correct_sentence: Everyone who lives in China thinks that the heavy traffic is normal.
error: nomal
correction: normal
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'normal', so 〈nomal〉 is a misspelling of 『normal』, and 〈nomal〉 needs to be changed to 『normal』 to make the sentence semantically correct.

error_sentence: But do you konw that?The large population has caused a lot of problems,not only in China,but also in many other countries.

correct_sentence: But do you know that the large population has caused a lot of problems, not only in China, but also in many other countries?

error: konw that?The
correction: know that the
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'know', so 〈konw〉 is a misspelling of 『know』, and 〈konw〉 needs to be changed to 『know』 to make the sentence semantically correct; ② Punctuation Error: The original sentence 〈But do you know that?The the large population...〉 is one sentence, and the question mark in the middle should be deleted.

error_sentence: But do you konw that?The large population has caused a lot of problems,not only in China,but also in many other countries.

correct_sentence: But do you know that the large population has caused a lot of problems, not only in China, but also in many other countries?

error: .
correction: ?
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: The original sentence 〈But do you know that the the large population has caused a lot of problems, not only in China, but also in many other countries〉 is an interrogative sentence, and the end of the sentence should use a question mark 『?』 instead of a period.

error_sentence: In many places there is little food,water or the energy.
correct_sentence: In many places there is little food, water or energy.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: 〈energy〉 is an uncountable noun, and when used in a general sense, it does not require an article in front of it, so the redundant 〈the〉 is deleted.

error_sentence: Besides the traffic problem that we have mentioned,there is not much enough room for us to live in.
correct_sentence: Besides the traffic problem that we have mentioned, there is not enough room for us to live in.
error: much
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: In the original sentence, 〈enough〉 already contains the meaning of sufficiency, and using 〈much〉 with it causes redundancy; deleting it makes the expression more concise.

error_sentence: Millions of people can't go home to go over the night everyday.
correct_sentence: Millions of people can't go home to stay overnight every day.
error: go over the night everyday
correction: stay overnight every day
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: Judging from the context, the intention here is to express 'stay overnight'; the original sentence's use of 〈go over the night〉 does not meet the semantic requirements and should be changed to 『stay overnight』 to accurately express the meaning; ② Adverb Error: 〈everyday〉 is an adjective, but an adverb is needed here as a time adverbial, so it should be separated into 『every day』.

error_sentence: Because of the large populaition,the pollution in the earth has become more and more serious.
correct_sentence: Because of the large population, the pollution in the earth has become more and more serious.
error: populaition
correction: population
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'population', so 〈populaition〉 is a misspelling of 『population』, and 〈populaition〉 needs to be changed to 『population』 to make the sentence semantically correct.

error_sentence: Although the large population has coused these problems,I think if we unity as one ,the sight of the future will be beautiful!
correct_sentence: Although the large population has caused these problems, I think if we unite as one, the sight of the future will be beautiful!
error: coused
correction: caused
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'caused', so 〈coused〉 is a misspelling of 『caused』, and 〈coused〉 needs to be changed to 『caused』 to make the sentence semantically correct.

error_sentence: Although the large population has coused these problems,I think if we unity as one ,the sight of the future will be beautiful!
correct_sentence: Although the large population has caused these problems, I think if we unite as one, the sight of the future will be beautiful!
error: unity
correction: unite
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: Judging from the meaning of the sentence, a verb is needed here as the predicate; in the original sentence, 〈unity〉 is a noun, so 〈unity〉 needs to be changed to the verb form 『unite』.