Writing prompt: The Leifeng Pagoda

Student essay:
Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Park is one of the most important national scenic area and histories site in China. The West Park covers an area of 6.39 square kilometers. Not only is the West Lake rich in beautiful sights, it also is well-know for its silk culture. A lot of tourists come to enjoy its unique charm every year. The most popular attraction of the West Lake is the Leifeng Pagoda. The Leifeng Pagoda is 71.679 meters high. There is home to spectacular Buddhist culture and poetry culture. Many tourists are also attracted by its beauty. Leifeng Pagoda also becomes famous by its romantic and sad love stories. One of the most famous is about White Lady and Xu Xian. White Lady was a beautiful lady. But she was a snake when she was young. She fell in love with Xu Xian and they finally got married. But White Lady was caught by Fahai because she was thought as a monster. And she was locked by Fahai in the Leifeng Pagoda. Tough had seen White Lady's true look, he still loved her so much. So he swept the Leifeng Pagoda in his whole life. Because of this moving end, there also becomes a place to tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.

Corrected essay:
Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Lake is one of the most important national scenic areas and historic sites in China. The West Lake covers an area of 6.39 square kilometers. Not only is the West Lake rich in beautiful sights, it also is well-known for its silk culture. A lot of tourists come to enjoy its unique charm every year. The most popular attraction of the West Lake is the Leifeng Pagoda. The Leifeng Pagoda is 71.679 meters high. It is home to spectacular Buddhist culture and poetry culture. Many tourists are also attracted by its beauty. Leifeng Pagoda also becomes famous for its romantic and sad love stories. One of the most famous is about White Lady and Xu Xian. White Lady was a beautiful lady. But she was a snake when she was young. She fell in love with Xu Xian and they finally got married. But White Lady was caught by Fahai because she was thought of as a monster. And she was locked by Fahai in the Leifeng Pagoda. Though Xu Xian had seen White Lady's true look, he still loved her so much. So he swept the Leifeng Pagoda his whole life. Because of this moving ending, it also becomes a place for tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Park is one of the most important national scenic area and histories site in China.
correct_sentence: Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Lake is one of the most important national scenic areas and historic sites in China.
error: Park
correction: Lake
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: Based on the context, the intended meaning here is 'West Lake'; 〈West Park〉 in the original sentence does not fit the semantic requirement and should be changed to 『West Lake』.

error_sentence: Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Park is one of the most important national scenic area and histories site in China.
correct_sentence: Standing in the east of Hangzhou, the West Lake is one of the most important national scenic areas and historic sites in China.
error: area and histories site
correction: areas and historic sites
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: Based on the context, 〈area〉 and 〈site〉 should be in plural form to be consistent with the modifier 〈most important national scenic〉, so 〈area〉 needs to be changed to 『areas』, and 〈site〉 to 『sites』; ② PoS Confusion Error: Based on the context, an adjective is needed here to modify the noun 『sites』; 〈histories〉 in the original sentence is a noun and needs to be changed to the adjective 『historic』.

error_sentence: The West Park covers an area of 6.39 square kilometers.
correct_sentence: The West Lake covers an area of 6.39 square kilometers.
error: Park
correction: Lake
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: Based on the context, the intended meaning here is 'West Lake'; 〈West Park〉 in the original sentence does not fit the semantic requirement and should be changed to 『West Lake』.

error_sentence: Not only is the West Lake rich in beautiful sights, it also is well-know for its silk culture.
correct_sentence: Not only is the West Lake rich in beautiful sights, it also is well-known for its silk culture.
error: know
correction: known
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express 'famous', so 〈well-know〉 is a misspelling of 『well-known』; 〈well-know〉 needs to be changed to 『well-known』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: There is home to spectacular Buddhist culture and poetry culture.
correct_sentence: It is home to spectacular Buddhist culture and poetry culture.
error: There
correction: It
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: In the original sentence 〈There is home to spectacular Buddhist culture and poetry culture.〉, the subject reference is unclear; 〈There〉 should be replaced with 『It』 to clearly refer to the previously mentioned 'Leifeng Pagoda'.

error_sentence: Leifeng Pagoda also becomes famous by its romantic and sad love stories.
correct_sentence: Leifeng Pagoda also becomes famous for its romantic and sad love stories.
error: by
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, 'famous for' means 'renowned for' and is a fixed phrase, so the preposition 〈by〉 is changed to 『for』.

error_sentence: But White Lady was caught by Fahai because she was thought as a monster.
correct_sentence: But White Lady was caught by Fahai because she was thought of as a monster.
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, 『of』 in the phrase 'be thought of as' cannot be omitted, so 『of』 is added to conform to the fixed phrase.

error_sentence: Tough had seen White Lady's true look, he still loved her so much.
correct_sentence: Though Xu Xian had seen White Lady's true look, he still loved her so much.
error: Tough
correction: Though Xu Xian
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express 'although', so 〈Tough〉 is a misspelling of 『Though』; 〈Tough〉 needs to be changed to 『Though』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Noun Error: The original sentence 〈Though had seen White Lady's true look〉 lacks a subject; based on the context, 『Xu Xian』 should be added to clarify the subject and ensure the sentence is complete.

error_sentence: So he swept the Leifeng Pagoda in his whole life.
correct_sentence: So he swept the Leifeng Pagoda his whole life.
error: in
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 〈in〉 in 〈in his whole life〉 is redundant; after deletion, 『his whole life』 is more in line with English expression habits.

error_sentence: Because of this moving end, there also becomes a place to tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.
correct_sentence: Because of this moving ending, it also becomes a place for tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.
error: end, there
correction: ending, it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: Based on the context, the intended meaning here is 'ending'; 〈end〉 is not appropriate in this context and should be changed to 『ending』 to correctly express the sentence meaning; ② Pronoun Error: According to English expression habits, 〈there〉 cannot refer to the preceding text and should be replaced with 『it』 to clearly refer to 'this moving ending'.

error_sentence: Because of this moving end, there also becomes a place to tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.
correct_sentence: Because of this moving ending, it also becomes a place for tourists to make a wish to guarantee their love.
error: to
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, when indicating purpose or object, 『for tourists』 should be used instead of 〈to〉, so the preposition 〈to〉 is changed to 『for』.