Writing prompt: Beijing

Student essay:
Hongxing Farm provides major supplies of fruits and vegetables to our school's restaurant.Hongxin Farm, located in the place of about 50 km from my school, covers an area of 130 acres.It is not far from our school.So, it can be more convenient for us to fetch the food from Hongxing to our school.In this way, we can taste fresher food.It produces many kinds of organic vegetables as well as organic fruits.Such as cucumbers, Chinese cabbages, carrots, pears and watermelons.Especially, apples are provided all through the year.It tastes extra sweet.
Some of you may ask why they are so good.It is using organic farming, technology and no fertilizer that makes it possible to produce better products.
Thanks to the supply of Hongxing Farm, we enjoy the food and grow healthy.Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Corrected essay:
Hongxing Farm provides major supplies of fruits and vegetables to our school's restaurant. Hongxing Farm, located about 50 km from my school, covers an area of 130 acres. It is not far from our school. So, it can be more convenient for us to fetch the food from Hongxing to our school. In this way, we can taste fresher food. It produces many kinds of organic vegetables as well as organic fruits, such as cucumbers, Chinese cabbages, carrots, pears and watermelons. Especially, apples are provided all through the year. They taste extra sweet.
Some of you may ask why they are so good. Its use of organic farming technology and no fertilizer makes it possible to produce better products.
Thanks to the supply of Hongxing Farm, we enjoy the food and grow healthy. Thank you from the bottom of my heart.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Hongxin Farm, located in the place of about 50 km from my school, covers an area of 130 acres.
correct_sentence: Hongxing Farm, located about 50 km from my school, covers an area of 130 acres.
error: Hongxin
correction: Hongxing
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is known that the intended expression here is “Hongxing Farm”, therefore 〈Hongxin〉 is a misspelling of 『Hongxing』, and 〈Hongxin〉 needs to be changed to 『Hongxing』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Hongxin Farm, located in the place of about 50 km from my school, covers an area of 130 acres.
correct_sentence: Hongxing Farm, located about 50 km from my school, covers an area of 130 acres.
error: in the place of
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: Combined with the context, it can be seen that directly using 〈located about 50 km〉 can accurately describe the location, so 〈in the place of〉 is deleted to correctly express the meaning of the sentence.

error_sentence: It produces many kinds of organic vegetables as well as organic fruits. Such as cucumbers, Chinese cabbages, carrots, pears and watermelons.
correct_sentence: It produces many kinds of organic vegetables as well as organic fruits, such as cucumbers, Chinese cabbages, carrots, pears and watermelons.
error: .Such
correction: , such
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: A comma should be used to connect the listed content with the main clause, so 〈.〉 is changed to 『,』 and 〈Such〉 is changed to 『such』; ② Space Error: There should be a space between the punctuation mark and the next word here, so 〈.Such〉 is changed to 『, such』 to conform to the norm.

error_sentence: It tastes extra sweet.

correct_sentence: They taste extra sweet.

error: It tastes
correction: They taste
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: This refers to the fruits (apples) mentioned earlier, which is in plural form, and the predicate verb should be in its base form to maintain subject-verb agreement, so 〈It tastes〉 is changed to 『They taste』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: It is using organic farming, technology and no fertilizer that makes it possible to produce better products.

correct_sentence: Its use of organic farming technology and no fertilizer makes it possible to produce better products.

error: It is using
correction: Its use of
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning. Combined with the context, it is known that the intended expression here is “Its use of organic farming technology”, so 〈It is using〉 is changed to 『Its use of』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: It is using organic farming, technology and no fertilizer that makes it possible to produce better products.

correct_sentence: Its use of organic farming technology and no fertilizer makes it possible to produce better products.

error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: Combined with the context, it is known that the intended expression here is “organic farming technology”. The comma in 〈organic farming, technology〉 incorrectly separates the compound noun phrase, so 〈,〉 is deleted to make the meaning coherent.

error_sentence: It is using organic farming, technology and no fertilizer that makes it possible to produce better products.

correct_sentence: Its use of organic farming technology and no fertilizer makes it possible to produce better products.

error: that
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: The relative word 〈that〉 causes sentence redundancy, so 〈that〉 is deleted to make the meaning clear.