Writing prompt: A Speech on Good Eating Habits

Student essay:
Dear friends,
As we all know, we are what we eat. Therefore, it is important for us to form healthy eating habits.
In my side, someone don't eat breakfast, someone love to eat snacks, someone particular, and someone overeating. I think these are all bad eating habits.
I think have a good eating diet is very important. It's helpful for our health. Here are some suggestions for you to improve your habit and get healthier.
•Have a variety of food.
•Have your breakfast every day.
•Eating regularly.
•Don't eat too much or too little.
•Eat less snaka.

Corrected essay:
Dear friends,
As we all know, we are what we eat. Therefore, it is important for us to form healthy eating habits.
In my opinion, some people don't eat breakfast, some love to eat snacks, some are particular, and some overeat. I think these are all bad eating habits.
I think having a good eating diet is very important. It's helpful for our health. Here are some suggestions for you to improve your habits and get healthier.
• Have a variety of food.
• Have your breakfast every day.
• Eat regularly.
• Don't eat too much or too little.
• Eat fewer snacks.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: In my side, someone don't eat breakfast, someone love to eat snacks, someone particular, and someone overeating.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, some people don't eat breakfast, some love to eat snacks, some are particular, and some overeat.
error: side, someone
correction: opinion, some people
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Error: 〈In my side〉 is a Chinglish expression, the correct phrase is 『In my opinion』, meaning “in my view”, therefore 〈side〉 is changed to 『opinion』 to correctly express the meaning; ② Pronoun Error: 〈someone〉 is a singular pronoun, which contradicts the plural context later in the text; the plural noun phrase 『some people』 should be used, therefore 〈someone〉 is changed to 『some people』 to correctly express the meaning.

error_sentence: In my side, someone don't eat breakfast, someone love to eat snacks, someone particular, and someone overeating.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, some people don't eat breakfast, some love to eat snacks, some are particular, and some overeat.
error: someone
correction: some
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: 〈someone〉 is a singular pronoun, which contradicts the plural context in the text, therefore 〈someone〉 is changed to 『some』 to correctly express the meaning.

error_sentence: In my side, someone don't eat breakfast, someone love to eat snacks, someone particular, and someone overeating.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, some people don't eat breakfast, some love to eat snacks, some are particular, and some overeat.
error: someone
correction: some are
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: 〈someone〉 is a singular pronoun, which contradicts the plural context in the text, therefore 〈someone〉 is changed to 『some』 to correctly express the meaning; ② Verb Choice Error: The sentence lacks a predicate verb, 〈some particular〉 cannot stand alone as a clause, it needs the linking verb 『are』 to form a complete subject-verb-complement structure, therefore 『are』 is added after 〈someone〉 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In my side, someone don't eat breakfast, someone love to eat snacks, someone particular, and someone overeating.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, some people don't eat breakfast, some love to eat snacks, some are particular, and some overeat.
error: someone overeating
correction: some overeat
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: 〈someone〉 is a singular pronoun, which contradicts the plural context in the text, therefore 〈someone〉 is changed to 『some』 to correctly express the meaning; ② PoS Confusion Error: 〈overeating〉 is a gerund and cannot be used as a predicate verb; 『overeat』 should be used as the predicate verb, therefore 〈overeating〉 is changed to 『overeat』 to conform to sentence tense and structure.

error_sentence: I think have a good eating diet is very important.
correct_sentence: I think having a good eating diet is very important.
error: have
correction: having
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the subject of a sentence is an action or behavior, the subject needs to be in the gerund form, therefore 〈have〉 is changed to the gerund 『having』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Here are some suggestions for you to improve your habit and get healthier.

correct_sentence: Here are some suggestions for you to improve your habits and get healthier.

error: habit
correction: habits
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈habit〉 is in singular form, which contradicts the semantic context of discussing multiple eating habits; the plural form 『habits』 should be used, therefore 〈habit〉 is changed to 『habits』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: •Have a variety of food.

correct_sentence: • Have a variety of food.

error: •Have
correction: • Have
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: A space needs to be kept between the bullet point and the following first word, therefore 〈•Have〉 is changed to 『• Have』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: •Have your breakfast every day.

correct_sentence: • Have your breakfast every day.

error: •Have
correction: • Have
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: A space needs to be kept between the bullet point and the following first word, therefore 〈•Have〉 is changed to 『• Have』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: •Eating regularly.

correct_sentence: • Eat regularly.

error: •Eating
correction: • Eat
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Space Error: A space needs to be kept between the bullet point and the following first word, therefore a space is added after 〈•〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The list of suggestions here should use the base form of the verb to express an imperative mood, therefore the gerund 〈Eating〉 is changed to 『Eat』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: •Don't eat too much or too little.

correct_sentence: • Don't eat too much or too little.

error: •Don't
correction: • Don't
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: A space needs to be kept between the bullet point and the following first word, therefore 〈•Don't〉 is changed to 『• Don't』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: •Eat less snaka.
correct_sentence: • Eat fewer snacks.
error: •Eat less snaka
correction: • Eat fewer snacks
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: A space needs to be kept between the bullet point and the following first word, therefore 〈•Eat〉 is changed to 『• Eat』 to conform to writing conventions; ② Adjective Error: 〈less〉 modifies uncountable nouns; here, 『fewer』 should be used to modify the countable noun “snacks”, therefore 〈less〉 is changed to 『fewer』 to comply with grammatical rules; ③ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that "snacks" is intended here, therefore 〈snaka〉 is a misspelling of 『snacks』 and needs to be changed to 『snacks』 to make the sentence coherent.