Writing prompt: I Enjoy the Life in the Future

Student essay:
I always image what the future of the world is like. I think it will be an amazing world.
In the future, people's car maybe can go to the sea, or fly in the sky. The house will "Green and smart", for example, when you are tired, it will turn off the light and play music, make you go to sleep in a faster way. When you feel boring, it will give some choice to make happy. If you don't know how to do a thing, it will give you some reasons to you.
There maybe no telephone in the future. When you want to talk with others, you can just call his/her name then he/she can hear your voice.
The world in future will be wonderful. I will very enjoy the life in the future.

Corrected essay:
I always imagine what the future of the world will be like. I think it will be an amazing world.
In the future, people's cars maybe can go to the sea, or fly in the sky. The house will be "green and smart." For example, when you are tired, it will turn off the light and play music to help you fall asleep in a faster way. When you feel bored, it will give you some choices to make you happy. If you don't know how to do something, it will give you some suggestions.
There may be no telephones in the future. When you want to talk with others, you can just call his/her name. Then he/she can hear your voice.
The world in the future will be wonderful. I will really enjoy the life in the future.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I always image what the future of the world is like.
correct_sentence: I always imagine what the future of the world will be like.
error: image
correction: imagine
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express "imagine", therefore 〈image〉 is a misspelling of 『imagine』, and it needs to be changed from 〈image〉 to 『imagine』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: I always image what the future of the world is like.
correct_sentence: I always imagine what the future of the world will be like.
error: is
correction: will be
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: Combining with the context, it is known that this describes a future scene, requiring the future tense, therefore 〈is〉 is modified to 『will be』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In the future, people's car maybe can go to the sea, or fly in the sky.
correct_sentence: In the future, people's cars maybe can go to the sea, or fly in the sky.
error: car
correction: cars
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: In 〈people's car〉, the subject is the plural concept "people's", the noun needs to be in plural form, therefore 〈car〉 is modified to 『cars』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: The house will "Green and smart", for example, when you are tired, it will turn off the light and play music, make you go to sleep in a faster way.
correct_sentence: The house will be "green and smart."
error: "Green
correction: be "green
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: The sentence structure here is incomplete, lacking the necessary 『be』 to connect the subject 〈house〉 with the descriptive phrase 〈"Green and smart"〉, therefore 『be』 is added after 〈will〉 to form a complete sentence; ② Case Error: 〈Green〉 is not a proper noun, nor is it at the beginning of a sentence, the first letter should be lowercase, therefore 〈Green〉 is modified to 『green』.

error_sentence: The house will "Green and smart", for example, when you are tired, it will turn off the light and play music, make you go to sleep in a faster way.
correct_sentence: The house will be "green and smart." For example, when you are tired, it will turn off the light and play music to help you fall asleep in a faster way.
error: ", for
correction: ." For
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A complete sentence within quotation marks needs to end with a period, and the first letter of the following word needs to be capitalized, therefore 〈", for〉 is modified to 『." For』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: The house will "Green and smart", for example, when you are tired, it will turn off the light and play music, make you go to sleep in a faster way.
correct_sentence: For example, when you are tired, it will turn off the light and play music to help you fall asleep in a faster way.
error: , make you go to sleep
correction: to help you fall asleep
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear meaning; combining with the context, it is known that the intention here is to express "help you fall asleep faster", therefore 〈, make you go to sleep〉 is modified to 『to help you fall asleep』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: When you feel boring, it will give some choice to make happy.
correct_sentence: When you feel bored, it will give you some choices to make you happy.
error: boring
correction: bored
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adjective Error: 〈boring〉 describes the characteristics of things, while the meaning expressed here is "a person feels bored", requiring 『bored』 to express subjective feeling, therefore 〈boring〉 is modified to 『bored』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: When you feel boring, it will give some choice to make happy.
correct_sentence: When you feel bored, it will give you some choices to make you happy.
error: some choice
correction: you some choices
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Other Error: The original sentence lacks an object for the action, therefore 『you』 is added after 〈give〉 to make the sentence structure complete; ② Noun Number Error: In 〈some choice〉, "choice" is a countable noun, requiring plural form to match the quantifier 〈some〉, therefore 〈choice〉 is modified to 『choices』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: When you feel boring, it will give some choice to make happy.
correct_sentence: When you feel bored, it will give you some choices to make you happy.
correction: you
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The original sentence lacks the object 『you』 to clarify the recipient of the action, therefore 『you』 is added after 〈make〉 to make the sentence structure complete.

error_sentence: If you don't know how to do a thing, it will give you some reasons to you.

correct_sentence: If you don't know how to do something, it will give you some suggestions.

error: a thing
correction: something
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Other Error: 〈a thing〉 generally refers to things and is not accurate or natural enough, 『something』 is more in line with the idiomatic expression for "something" in English, therefore 〈a thing〉 is modified to 『something』 to conform to English idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: If you don't know how to do a thing, it will give you some reasons to you.

correct_sentence: If you don't know how to do something, it will give you some suggestions.

error: reasons to you
correction: suggestions
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: 〈reasons〉 does not fit the context, "suggestions" needs to be expressed here, therefore 〈reasons〉 is modified to 『suggestions』 to correctly express the sentence meaning; ② Word Redundancy Error: The preceding 〈give you〉 already sufficiently expresses the meaning "give you", therefore 〈to you〉 is deleted to standardize the sentence structure.

error_sentence: There maybe no telephone in the future.
correct_sentence: There may be no telephones in the future.
error: maybe no telephone
correction: may be no telephones
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Other Error: 〈maybe〉 is an adverb "perhaps", here a "modal verb + be" structure is needed to indicate that a certain situation or state may occur, therefore 〈maybe 〉 is modified to 『may be』 to standardize the sentence structure; ② Noun Number Error: The noun 〈telephone〉 needs to be in plural form for general reference, therefore 〈telephone〉 is modified to 『telephones』 to correctly express the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: When you want to talk with others, you can just call his/her name then he/she can hear your voice.

correct_sentence: When you want to talk with others, you can just call his/her name. Then he/she can hear your voice.

error: then
correction: . Then
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈When you want to talk with others, you can just call his/her name〉 and 〈then he/she can hear your voice〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, therefore 〈then〉 is modified to 『. Then』 to conform to punctuation rules.

error_sentence: The world in future will be wonderful.
correct_sentence: The world in the future will be wonderful.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The fixed phrase 『in the future』 means "in the future", therefore 『the』 is added after 〈in〉 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: I will very enjoy the life in the future.
correct_sentence: I will really enjoy the life in the future.
error: very
correction: really
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adverb Error: 〈very〉 cannot directly modify a verb, the adverb 『really』 is needed to strengthen the tone, therefore 〈very〉 is modified to 『really』 to express "really enjoy".