Writing prompt: The Beauty Contests Should Be Held among Teenagers?

Student essay:
In the past few days, our class had a popular topic about the beauty contest should be held among teenagers. Some students think everyone has love beauty in common. The beauty contests provide a stage about showing beauty and admire beauty.
It is important to improve teenagers' admire beauty ability. For example , choosing the suitable clothes for impotent occasions. Other students think pay more attention on appearance is wrong. and as for senior high school students ta take part in the contests not only waste money but also waste their time.
As far as i am concerned , i think beauty contests should not be held among teenages. Because the important thing you should do now is study hard , making your dream come ture , instead of seeking appeared beauty.

Corrected essay:
In the past few days, our class had a popular topic about whether beauty contests should be held among teenagers. Some students think everyone has a love for beauty in common. The beauty contests provide a stage for showing beauty and admiring beauty.
It is important to improve teenagers' ability to admire beauty. For example, choosing suitable clothes for important occasions. Other students think paying more attention to appearance is wrong, and for senior high school students, taking part in the contests not only wastes money but also wastes their time.
As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: In the past few days, our class had a popular topic about the beauty contest should be held among teenagers.
correct_sentence: In the past few days, our class had a popular topic about whether beauty contests should be held among teenagers.
error: the beauty contest
correction: whether beauty contests
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English clause structure rules, the sentence lacks a necessary conjunction to introduce the discussion content; 〈the beauty contest〉 needs to be replaced with 『whether beauty contests』 to clearly express the discussion topic of "whether beauty contests should be held," conforming to the grammatical requirements of an object clause; ② Noun Number Error: According to the contextual meaning, 〈contest〉 refers to a general concept and needs to be changed to the plural form 『contests』 to maintain consistency with the overall context, conforming to English noun number usage norms.

error_sentence: Some students think everyone has love beauty in common.
correct_sentence: Some students think everyone has a love for beauty in common.
error: love
correction: a love for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English article rules, when the abstract noun 〈love〉 expresses the general concept of "a kind of love," the indefinite article 『a』 needs to be added to form 『a love』 to meet grammatical requirements; ② Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, 『love for』 should be used to express "love for...", so the incorrect preposition needs to be replaced with 『for』 to ensure correct collocation.

error_sentence: The beauty contests provide a stage about showing beauty and admire beauty.

correct_sentence: The beauty contests provide a stage for showing beauty and admiring beauty.

error: about
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, 『stage for showing』 should be used to express purpose, not 〈about〉; this is a fixed collocation error and should be corrected to 『for』 to accurately express the meaning of "a stage for showing."

error_sentence: The beauty contests provide a stage about showing beauty and admire beauty.

correct_sentence: The beauty contests provide a stage for showing beauty and admiring beauty.

error: admire
correction: admiring
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the principle of parallel structure, the two components connected by the preposition 〈and〉 need to maintain grammatical consistency; therefore, the base form of the verb 〈admire〉 is changed to the gerund 『admiring』 to match the preceding verb 〈showing〉, making the structure balanced.

error_sentence: It is important to improve teenagers' admire beauty ability.
correct_sentence: It is important to improve teenagers' ability to admire beauty.
correction: ability to
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Order Error: According to English noun phrase construction rules, the word order of 〈admire beauty ability〉 is confused and should be adjusted to 『ability to admire beauty』, conforming to the standard expression of "ability + infinitive"; ② Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, the noun 〈ability〉 needs to be followed by the infinitive marker 『to』 to introduce a modifying component; therefore, 『to』 should be added after 〈ability〉 to form a correct structure.

error_sentence: It is important to improve teenagers' admire beauty ability.
correct_sentence: It is important to improve teenagers' ability to admire beauty.
error: ability
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The original phrase 〈admire beauty ability〉 has semantic repetition; deleting the redundant word 〈ability〉 and adjusting the word order to 『 ability to admire beauty』 makes the expression more concise and natural.

error_sentence: For example , choosing the suitable clothes for impotent occasions.
correct_sentence: For example, choosing suitable clothes for important occasions.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English article usage rules, 〈clothes〉 is a generic concept and does not require the definite article 〈the〉; deleting it makes the expression more in line with natural usage.

error_sentence: For example , choosing the suitable clothes for impotent occasions.
correct_sentence: For example, choosing suitable clothes for important occasions.
error: impotent
correction: important
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary spelling norms, the adjective 〈impotent〉 is misspelled and cannot express the original meaning. It should be changed to the adjective 『important』 to correctly modify the noun 〈occasion〉, forming the phrase 『important occasion』, expressing "important occasions."

error_sentence: Other students think pay more attention on appearance is wrong.
correct_sentence: Other students think paying more attention to appearance is wrong, and for senior high school students, taking part in the contests not only wastes money but also wastes their time.

error: pay
correction: paying
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, the base form of the verb 〈pay〉 cannot directly serve as the subject. It should be changed to the gerund 『paying』, forming the gerund phrase 『paying more attention to』 as the subject, conforming to nonfinite verb usage.

error_sentence: Other students think pay more attention on appearance is wrong.
correct_sentence: Other students think paying more attention to appearance is wrong, and for senior high school students, taking part in the contests not only wastes money but also wastes their time.

error: on
correction: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, the phrase "pay attention" should use 『pay attention to』; the incorrect preposition 〈on〉 needs to be replaced with 『to』 to ensure correct collocation.

error_sentence: Other students think pay more attention on appearance is wrong. and as for senior high school students ta take part in the contests not only waste money but also waste their time.

correct_sentence: Other students think paying more attention to appearance is wrong, and for senior high school students, taking part in the contests not only wastes money but also wastes their time.

error: . and as
correction: , and
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English compound sentence norms, two independent clauses need to be connected by a comma and a coordinating conjunction. The period should be changed to 『, and』 to avoid a run-on sentence error and ensure sentence coherence; ② Word Redundancy Error: In the phrase 〈and as for senior high school students〉, 〈as〉 is a redundant preposition. According to the principle of conciseness, delete 〈as〉 and keep 『for senior high school students』 to make the expression more natural.

error_sentence: and as for senior high school students ta take part in the contests not only waste money but also waste their time.

correct_sentence: Other students think paying more attention to appearance is wrong, and for senior high school students, taking part in the contests not only wastes money but also wastes their time.

error: ta take
correction: , taking
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English adverbial phrase separation rules, the prepositional phrase 〈for senior high school students〉, as an adverbial, needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. 『,』 should be added after 〈students〉 to clarify the sentence structure; ② Word Redundancy Error: The original phrase 〈ta take〉 contains the meaningless word 〈ta〉, affecting semantic clarity. According to expressive needs, directly delete the redundant component 〈ta〉; ③ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The base form of the verb 〈take〉 does not conform to the grammatical structure here. It should be changed to the gerund 『taking』, forming the phrase 『taking part in』 as the subject, conforming to the grammatical rule of gerunds as subjects.

error_sentence: and as for senior high school students ta take part in the contests not only waste money but also waste their time.

correct_sentence: Other students think paying more attention to appearance is wrong, and for senior high school students, taking part in the contests not only wastes money but also wastes their time.

error: waste
correction: wastes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈taking part in the contests〉 is a singular concept; according to the principle of subject-verb agreement, the predicate verb needs to use the third-person singular form 『wastes』, correcting the original incorrect form 〈waste〉 to 『wastes』.

error_sentence: and as for senior high school students ta take part in the contests not only waste money but also waste their time.

correct_sentence: Other students think paying more attention to appearance is wrong, and for senior high school students, taking part in the contests not only wastes money but also wastes their time.

error: waste
correction: wastes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the English principle of subject-verb agreement, in a parallel structure, the second predicate verb needs to agree with the subject 〈taking part〉; therefore, 〈waste〉 is changed to the third-person singular form 『wastes』 to conform to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: As far as i am concerned , i think beauty contests should not be held among teenages.
correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.
error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun 〈i〉 at the beginning of a sentence must be capitalized; it should be corrected to 『I』 to comply with English capitalization rules.

error_sentence: As far as i am concerned , i think beauty contests should not be held among teenages.
correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.
error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun 〈i〉 at the beginning of a sentence must be capitalized; it should be corrected to 『I』 to comply with English capitalization rules.

error_sentence: As far as i am concerned , i think beauty contests should not be held among teenages. Because the important thing you should do now is study hard , making your dream come ture , instead of seeking appeared beauty.
correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.
error: teenages. Because
correction: teenagers because
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: 〈teenages〉 is an incorrect spelling form; according to English noun formation rules, it should be changed to the correct spelling 『teenagers』, expressing the meaning of "teenagers," to accurately convey the semantics; ② Punctuation Error: The original sentence incorrectly uses a period, breaking the complete semantic relationship; according to English clause connection rules, it should be changed to 『teenagers because』 to maintain the coherence of the adverbial clause of reason; ③ Case Error: In the sentence, 〈Because〉 as a subordinating conjunction located in the middle of the sentence should not be capitalized; according to English capitalization rules, it should be changed to the lowercase form 『because』.

error_sentence: Because the important thing you should do now is study hard , making your dream come ture , instead of seeking appeared beauty.
correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.
correction: to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The structure 〈is study〉 does not conform to English predicative clause norms; according to grammar rules, the infinitive marker 『to』 needs to be added to form the complete structure 『is to study』 to correctly express the meaning "what should be done is to study hard."

error_sentence: Because the important thing you should do now is study hard , making your dream come ture , instead of seeking appeared beauty.
correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.
error: , making
correction: and make
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to the English principle of parallel structure, the two verb phrases 〈study hard〉 and 〈make your dream come true〉 need to be connected by the coordinating conjunction 『and』, replacing the original incorrect comma form, to constitute 『study hard and make your dream come true』; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The original comma-separated 〈, making〉 leads to a confused sentence structure; according to English rules for parallel predicates, it should be changed to 『and make』 to correctly connect the two predicate verbs and maintain sentence structural balance.

error_sentence: Because the important thing you should do now is study hard , making your dream come ture , instead of seeking appeared beauty.
correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.
error: ture
correction: true
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈ture〉 is an obvious spelling error; according to English adjective spelling norms, it should be changed to the correct form 『true』 to accurately express the meaning of "come true."

error_sentence: Because the important thing you should do now is study hard , making your dream come ture , instead of seeking appeared beauty.
correct_sentence: As far as I am concerned, I think beauty contests should not be held among teenagers because the important thing you should do now is to study hard and make your dream come true, instead of seeking beauty of appearance.
error: appeared beauty
correction: beauty of appearance
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Order Error: According to English noun phrase expression habits, the word order of 〈seeking appeared beauty〉 does not conform to idiomatic expression. It should be adjusted to 『seeking beauty of appearance』 to make the meaning clearer and more natural; ② PoS Confusion Error: In the original sentence, 〈appeared〉 is a past tense verb and cannot directly modify a noun. According to English grammar rules, it needs to be changed to the noun phrase 『beauty of appearance』 to correctly express the concept of "beauty of appearance"; ③ Preposition Error: According to English possessive expression rules, when expressing "beauty in a certain aspect," the preposition 『of』 needs to be used for connection. Therefore, 『of』 is added to form the standard expression 『beauty of appearance』. Finally, the incorrect expression 〈seeking appeared beauty〉 is entirely corrected to 『seeking beauty of appearance』, which conforms to English idiomatic usage, accurately conveying the meaning of "seeking beauty of appearance."