Writing prompt: Make the World Better

Student essay:
WHAT CAN MAKE THE WORLD BETTER?
More people want to know this question:what can make our world better, how should we do?
I think love can make our world better:because love can make the light not seems so far away. Love can make the children will not alone any more.
Love belongs to anyone in this world. Love is a gift from the God. When we were born we have the love from our family.Maybe sometime you do not understand how much other love you.
But please look around this world. Someone sacrifice their live to save another. Their love can help many persons get warm.
We stay strong because of the love. We have been broken but because of love, araise again.
All this is because of love.
IF WE GIVE OUR LOVE TO SOMEONE, MABY THE LOVE WILL CHANGE TO HOPE FOR THIS WORLD.
Love is where heart is
SO OPEN YOUR HEART TO LOVE. USE YOUR LOVE TO MAKE THE WOLRD BETTER.

Corrected essay:
What can make the world better?
More people want to know this question: What can make our world better, and how should we do it?
I think love can make our world better, because love can make the light not seem so far away. Love can make the children not alone any more.
Love belongs to anyone in this world. Love is a gift from God. When we are born we have the love from our family. Maybe sometimes you do not understand how much others love you.
But please look around this world. Someone sacrifices their life to save another. Their love can help many people get warm.
We stay strong because of love. We have been broken but because of love, we arise again.
All this is because of love.
If we give our love to someone, maybe the love will change to hope for this world.
Love is where the heart is.
So open your heart to love. Use your love to make the world better.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: WHAT CAN MAKE THE WORLD BETTER?

correct_sentence: What can make the world better?

error: WHAT CAN MAKE THE WORLD BETTER
correction: What can make the world better
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: All letters capitalized in the title do not conform to English writing conventions; it should maintain initial capitalization format, therefore 〈WHAT CAN MAKE THE WORLD BETTER〉 is changed to 『What can make the world better』 to comply with writing conventions.

error_sentence: More people want to know this question:what can make our world better, how should we do?

correct_sentence: More people want to know this question: What can make our world better, and how should we do it?

error: what
correction: What
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, therefore 〈what〉 needs to be changed to 『What』 to comply with conventions.

error_sentence: More people want to know this question:what can make our world better, how should we do?

correct_sentence: More people want to know this question: What can make our world better, and how should we do it?

correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: 〈what can make our world better〉 and 〈how should we do〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can stand as independent sentences, therefore 『and』 is added before 〈how〉 to standardize the sentence structure.

error_sentence: More people want to know this question:what can make our world better, how should we do?

correct_sentence: More people want to know this question: What can make our world better, and how should we do it?

correction: it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The verb 〈do〉 requires an object to clarify the action's target; here, 『it』 is needed to refer to the previously mentioned action 〈make our world better〉, therefore 『it』 is added after 〈do〉 to standardize the sentence structure.

error_sentence: I think love can make our world better:because love can make the light not seems so far away.
correct_sentence: I think love can make our world better, because love can make the light not seem so far away.
error: :
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A comma should be used here to connect the main clause and the adverbial clause of reason, therefore 〈:〉 is changed to 『,』 to comply with punctuation rules.

error_sentence: I think love can make our world better:because love can make the light not seems so far away.
correct_sentence: I think love can make our world better, because love can make the light not seem so far away.
error: seems
correction: seem
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Other Error: The object complement after the causative verb 〈make〉 requires the base form of the verb, therefore 〈seems〉 is changed to 『seem』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Love can make the children will not alone any more.

correct_sentence: Love can make the children not alone any more.

error: will
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The object complement after the causative verb 〈make〉 cannot use the future tense, therefore the redundant 〈will〉 is deleted to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Love is a gift from the God.
correct_sentence: Love is a gift from God.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The proper noun 〈God〉 does not require an article when used in a general sense, therefore the redundant 〈the〉 is deleted to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: When we were born we have the love from our family.
correct_sentence: When we are born we have the love from our family.
error: were
correction: are
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a general fact and should use the simple present tense, therefore 〈were〉 is changed to 『are』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Maybe sometime you do not understand how much other love you.

correct_sentence: Maybe sometimes you do not understand how much others love you.

error: sometime
correction: sometimes
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adverb Error: 〈sometime〉 means 'at some point in time', whereas here it should express 'occasionally', therefore 〈sometime〉 is changed to 『sometimes』 to correctly convey the meaning.

error_sentence: Maybe sometime you do not understand how much other love you.

correct_sentence: Maybe sometimes you do not understand how much others love you.

error: other
correction: others
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: This expresses 'other people', therefore 〈other〉 is changed to 『others』 to correctly convey the meaning.

error_sentence: Someone sacrifice their live to save another.
correct_sentence: Someone sacrifices their life to save another.
error: sacrifice their live
correction: sacrifices their life
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈Someone〉 is third-person singular and requires the third-person singular form of the verb, therefore 〈sacrifice〉 is changed to 『sacrifices』 to comply with subject-verb agreement rules; ② Noun Error: This expresses 'life', therefore 〈live〉 is changed to 『life』 to correctly convey the meaning.

error_sentence: Their love can help many persons get warm.

correct_sentence: Their love can help many people get warm.

error: persons
correction: people
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: In formal contexts, 'people' should be expressed using 『people』, therefore 〈persons〉 is changed to 『people』 to comply with common usage.

error_sentence: We stay strong because of the love.
correct_sentence: We stay strong because of love.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The abstract noun 〈love〉 does not require an article when used in a general sense, therefore the redundant 〈the〉 is deleted to comply with common usage.

error_sentence: We have been broken but because of love, araise again.

correct_sentence: We have been broken but because of love, we arise again.

error: araise
correction: we arise
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The adverbial clause lacks a subject; considering the context, it aims to express 'we have been broken, but because of love, we arise again', therefore 〈araise〉 is changed to 『we arise』 to make the meaning coherent and comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: IF WE GIVE OUR LOVE TO SOMEONE, MABY THE LOVE WILL CHANGE TO HOPE FOR THIS WORLD.

correct_sentence: If we give our love to someone, maybe the love will change to hope for this world.

error: IF WE GIVE OUR LOVE TO SOMEONE, MABY THE LOVE WILL CHANGE TO HOPE FOR THIS WORLD
correction: If we give our love to someone, maybe the love will change to hope for this world
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: A fully capitalized sentence does not conform to standard body text writing conventions; it should maintain initial capitalization format, therefore 〈IF WE GIVE OUR LOVE TO SOMEONE, MABY THE LOVE WILL CHANGE TO HOPE FOR THIS WORLD〉 is changed to 『If we give our love to someone, maybe the love will change to hope for this world』 to comply with writing conventions.

error_sentence: Love is where heart is
SO OPEN YOUR HEART TO LOVE.
correct_sentence: Love is where the heart is.

correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The noun 〈heart〉 in the sentence requires the determiner 『the』 for specific reference, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈heart〉 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Love is where heart is
SO OPEN YOUR HEART TO LOVE. USE YOUR LOVE TO MAKE THE WOLRD BETTER.
correct_sentence: Love is where the heart is.
 So open your heart to love. Use your love to make the world better.
error: 
SO OPEN YOUR HEART TO LOVE. USE YOUR LOVE TO MAKE THE WOLRD BETTER
correction: .
So open your heart to love. Use your love to make the world better
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: A fully capitalized sentence does not conform to standard body text writing conventions; it should maintain initial capitalization format, therefore 〈SO OPEN YOUR HEART TO LOVE. USE YOUR LOVE TO MAKE THE WOLRD BETTER〉 is changed to 『So open your heart to love. Use your love to make the world better』 to comply with writing conventions.