Writing prompt: Vickey's China Trip

Student essay:
Dear Dad and Mom,
I'm in Beijing and live in my friend's home now. Febrary 19th is Spring Festival this year. During Spring Festival, Chinese always do fireworks and visit each other.
In Beijing, I make some new friends. We often study, talk and do sport together. We visit some place of inerest, watch Peking Opera and eat some Chinese tridtional food. They tell me many history of China. It's very ineresting. On the eve of Spring Festival, we have Chiese jiaozi as dinner.
There are some difference with Canada, I like Chinese life and my new friends.
Yours,
Vickey

Corrected essay:
Dear Dad and Mom,
I'm in Beijing and living in my friend's home now. February 19th is the Spring Festival this year. During the Spring Festival, Chinese people always set off fireworks and visit each other.
In Beijing, I have made some new friends. We often study, talk and do sports together. We visit some places of interest, watch Peking Opera and eat some Chinese traditional food. They tell me much about the history of China. It's very interesting. On the eve of the Spring Festival, we have Chinese jiaozi for dinner.
There are some differences compared with Canada. I like Chinese life and my new friends.
Yours,
Vickey

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Dear Dad and Mom,
I'm in Beijing and live in my friend's home now.
correct_sentence: Dear Dad and Mom,
I'm in Beijing and living in my friend's home now.
error: live
correction: living
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the present progressive tense should be used here, while 〈live〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense, so 〈live〉 needs to be changed to the progressive form 『living』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: Febrary 19th is Spring Festival this year.
correct_sentence: February 19th is the Spring Festival this year.
error: Febrary
correction: February
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'February', so 〈Febrary〉 is a misspelling of 『February』; 〈Febrary〉 needs to be corrected to 『February』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Febrary 19th is Spring Festival this year.
correct_sentence: February 19th is the Spring Festival this year.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, when the festival name 〈Spring Festival〉 is used as a specific proper noun, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added, so 〈Spring Festival〉 needs to be changed to 『the Spring Festival』 to conform to the expression.

error_sentence: During Spring Festival, Chinese always do fireworks and visit each other.

correct_sentence: During the Spring Festival, Chinese people always set off fireworks and visit each other.

correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, when the festival name 〈Spring Festival〉 is used as a specific proper noun, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added, so 〈Spring Festival〉 needs to be changed to 『the Spring Festival』 to conform to the expression.

error_sentence: During Spring Festival, Chinese always do fireworks and visit each other.

correct_sentence: During the Spring Festival, Chinese people always set off fireworks and visit each other.

error: always do
correction: people always set off
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'Chinese people'; in the original sentence, 〈Chinese〉 as an adjective needs to be followed by a noun, so it should be changed to 『Chinese people』 to clarify the subject and fit the context; ② Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence means 'set off fireworks'; the original phrase 〈do fireworks〉 does not conform to English collocation habits, so 〈do〉 needs to be changed to 『set off』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: In Beijing, I make some new friends.
correct_sentence: In Beijing, I have made some new friends.
error: make
correction: have made
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence emphasizes the impact of a past action on the present, so the present perfect tense should be used, while 〈make〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense, so 〈make〉 needs to be changed to 『have made』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: We often study, talk and do sport together.
correct_sentence: We often study, talk and do sports together.
error: sport
correction: sports
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈sport〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『sports』 to indicate specific sports activities, so 〈sport〉 should be changed to 『sports』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: We visit some place of inerest, watch Peking Opera and eat some Chinese tridtional food.
correct_sentence: We visit some places of interest, watch Peking Opera and eat some Chinese traditional food.
error: place of inerest
correction: places of interest
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈place〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『places』 to indicate multiple attractions, so 〈place〉 should be changed to 『places』 to fit the context; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'places of interest', so 〈inerest〉 is a misspelling of 『interest』; 〈inerest〉 needs to be corrected to 『interest』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: We visit some place of inerest, watch Peking Opera and eat some Chinese tridtional food.
correct_sentence: We visit some places of interest, watch Peking Opera and eat some Chinese traditional food.
error: tridtional
correction: traditional
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'traditional', so 〈tridtional〉 is a misspelling of 『traditional』; 〈tridtional〉 needs to be corrected to 『traditional』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: They tell me many history of China.
correct_sentence: They tell me much about the history of China.
error: many
correction: much about the
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, 『much』 modifies uncountable nouns, while 〈many〉 modifies countable nouns; in the original sentence, 〈history〉 is an uncountable noun, so 〈many〉 needs to be changed to 『much』 to conform to English grammar; ② Preposition Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'about the history of China'; the original sentence lacks a prepositional phrase, so 『about the』 needs to be added to clarify the scope of the historical content.

error_sentence: It's very ineresting.
correct_sentence: It's very interesting.
error: ineresting
correction: interesting
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'interesting', so 〈ineresting〉 is a misspelling of 『interesting』; 〈ineresting〉 needs to be corrected to 『interesting』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: On the eve of Spring Festival, we have Chiese jiaozi as dinner.

correct_sentence: On the eve of the Spring Festival, we have Chinese jiaozi for dinner.

correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, when the festival name 〈Spring Festival〉 is used as a specific proper noun, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added, so 〈Spring Festival〉 needs to be changed to 『the Spring Festival』 to conform to the expression.

error_sentence: On the eve of Spring Festival, we have Chiese jiaozi as dinner.

correct_sentence: On the eve of the Spring Festival, we have Chinese jiaozi for dinner.

error: Chiese jiaozi as
correction: Chinese jiaozi for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'Chinese', so 〈Chiese〉 is a misspelling of 『Chinese』; 〈Chiese〉 needs to be corrected to 『Chinese』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the collocation 〈as dinner〉 is inappropriate, so 〈as〉 needs to be changed to 『for』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: There are some difference with Canada, I like Chinese life and my new friends.

correct_sentence: There are some differences compared with Canada.
error: difference
correction: differences compared
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈difference〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『differences』 to match the multiple distinctions referred to in the context, so 〈difference〉 needs to be changed to 『differences』 to fit the meaning; ② Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'compared with...'; the original sentence lacks a predicate verb, so 『compared』 needs to be added to clearly express the object of comparison.

error_sentence: There are some difference with Canada, I like Chinese life and my new friends.

correct_sentence: There are some differences compared with Canada.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent clauses need to be separated by a period to avoid a run-on sentence; in the original sentence, 〈There are some difference with Canada〉 and 〈I like Chinese life and my new friends〉 are two main clauses, so 〈,〉 is changed to 『.』 to conform to grammar.