Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
I'm L, a sophomore in high school, and I am honored to be in the English speech contest organized by the school.
In the west, there are a lot of festivals, such as father's day, mother's day, Halloween, Christmas, Carnival and Thanksgiving. In the holiday, my favorite is mother's day. The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions. Mother never because of poverty and disease, and to abandon their children some ugly. When the child suffers from suffering and pain, is the mother of the day and night, anxiety, anxiety, hate can not for her pain, for him.
I am looking forward to the Chinese people to have their own mother's day, and set a statutory holiday.

Corrected essay:
I'm L, a sophomore in high school, and I am honored to be in the English speech contest organized by the school.
In the west, there are a lot of festivals, such as Father's Day, Mother's Day, Halloween, Christmas, Carnival and Thanksgiving. Among these holidays, my favorite is Mother's Day. The reason is that when I get a little bit of success, my mother is very happy, tells anyone she speaks to and relishes it, because this is her pride. When her children encounter mistakes, my mother will silently swallow that sadness and regret, offering guidance and earnest instructions. Mothers never because of poverty, disease or ugliness abandon their children. When the child suffers from suffering and pain, it is the mother who is anxious day and night, and hates can not take the pain, for him.
I am looking forward to the Chinese people having their own Mother's Day, and setting it as a statutory holiday.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: In the west, there are a lot of festivals, such as father's day, mother's day, Halloween, Christmas, Carnival and Thanksgiving.
correct_sentence: In the west, there are a lot of festivals, such as Father's Day, Mother's Day, Halloween, Christmas, Carnival and Thanksgiving.
error: father's day, mother's day
correction: Father's Day, Mother's Day
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, festival names are proper nouns and their initial letters should be capitalized. In the original sentence, the initial letters of 〈father's day〉 and 〈mother's day〉 are not capitalized, which does not conform to the convention; they should be changed to 『Father's Day』 and 『Mother's Day』 respectively to meet standard writing requirements.

error_sentence: In the holiday, my favorite is mother's day.
correct_sentence: Among these holidays, my favorite is Mother's Day.
error: In the holiday
correction: Among these holidays
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Preposition Error: In English expression habits, for a comparative context like “among many things,” 〈Among〉 should be used. The original sentence's use of 〈In〉 cannot accurately convey the meaning of “among many festivals,” so 〈In〉 needs to be changed to 『Among』.; ② Determiner Error: In the original sentence, the determiner in 〈the holiday〉 is used improperly; "the" does not clearly refer to the multiple festivals listed earlier, making the meaning vague. To correspond to the multiple festivals mentioned before, it should be changed to the clearly referential 『these』.; ③ Noun Number Error: Considering the preceding context, multiple festivals are being discussed here. In the original sentence, 〈holiday〉 is in singular form, which does not meet the semantic requirement and should be changed to the plural form 『holidays』 to make the expression accurate and clear.

error_sentence: In the holiday, my favorite is mother's day.
correct_sentence: Among these holidays, my favorite is Mother's Day.
error: mother's day
correction: Mother's Day
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, festival names are proper nouns and their initial letters need to be capitalized. In the original sentence, the initial letter of 〈mother's day〉 is not capitalized, which does not meet the requirement; it should be changed to 『Mother's Day』 to make the writing conform to standard conventions.

error_sentence: The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions.
correct_sentence: The reason is that when I get a little bit of success, my mother is very happy, tells anyone she speaks to and relishes it, because this is her pride.
error: the children
correction: I
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar and contextual logic, 〈the children〉 in the original sentence is inconsistent with the subsequent logical subject 〈my mother〉. From the semantic expression of the sentence, it is narrating events from “my” perspective; to clarify the narrative subject and make the sentence logically coherent, 〈the children〉 should be changed to the first-person pronoun 『I』.

error_sentence: The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions.
correct_sentence: The reason is that when I get a little bit of success, my mother is very happy, tells anyone she speaks to and relishes it, because this is her pride.
correction: is
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: When expressing "my mother very happy," the original sentence omits the key predicate verb, resulting in an incomplete sentence structure. To ensure sentence completeness, according to basic English sentence structure requirements, the linking verb 『is』 should be added, enabling the sentence to correctly express the meaning “my mother is very happy.”

error_sentence: The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions.
correct_sentence: The reason is that when I get a little bit of success, my mother is very happy, tells anyone she speaks to and relishes it, because this is her pride.
error: telling anyone speak, relish
correction: tells anyone she speaks to and relishes it
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: In the original sentence, "telling" is a non-finite verb form and is inconsistent with the main clause tense. According to the overall tense and semantic needs of the sentence, it should be changed to the simple present tense predicate verb form 『tells』 to unify the sentence tense; ② Sentence Structure Error: In the original sentence, 〈speak〉 lacks a logical subject and necessary preposition. In the “tells anyone” structure, for “speak” to express the meaning “speak to someone,” a logical subject and preposition need to be added, changing it to 『she speaks to』 to make the clause structure complete and its meaning clear; ③ Pronoun Error: In the original sentence, 〈relish〉 is a transitive verb and needs an object following it to fully express the meaning. Based on the previously mentioned success of the child, the object 『it』 should be added here, referring to the preceding "a little bit of success," to make the sentence expression accurate.

error_sentence: The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions.
correct_sentence: The reason is that when I get a little bit of success, my mother is very happy, tells anyone she speaks to and relishes it, because this is her pride. When her children encounter mistakes, my mother will silently swallow that sadness and regret, offering guidance and earnest instructions.
error: ; their
correction: . When her
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to grammatical requirements, independent main clauses should be separated by a period. In the original sentence 〈; their children encounter wrong〉, the semicolon cannot connect an independent main clause and a subordinate clause here, which does not conform to English punctuation rules. The semicolon should be changed to a period 『.』 to correctly distinguish sentence structures; ② Conjunction Error: In the original sentence, "their children encounter wrong" lacks a guiding conjunction, making the logical relationship unclear. The conjunction 『When her』 should be added, forming "When her children encounter mistakes," to clarify the logical relationship of the adverbial clause of time and make the sentence's meaning coherent; ③ Pronoun Error: In the original sentence, 〈their〉 is inconsistent with the preceding subject "my mother." To maintain subject consistency, 〈their〉 should be changed to 『her』, making the sentence semantically and logically smoother.

error_sentence: The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions.
correct_sentence: When her children encounter mistakes, my mother will silently swallow that sadness and regret, offering guidance and earnest instructions.
error: wrong,
correction: mistakes, my
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Error: In the original sentence, when 〈wrong〉 is used as a noun, it means “wrongdoing,” but in this context, expressing that children encounter errors, using “wrongdoing” is not accurate. According to the context, it should be changed to the specific noun 『mistakes』, meaning “errors,” to make the semantics more appropriate; ② Determiner Error: In the original sentence, the determiner "their" in "their children" is inconsistent with the preceding logic. The preceding text has been narrating around "my mother," so here it should be clear that they are "my mother's" children, i.e., "my children." Using the determiner "my" would make the sentence's logic and referential relationship clearer, aligning with the contextual semantics.

error_sentence: The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions.
correct_sentence: When her children encounter mistakes, my mother will silently swallow that sadness and regret, offering guidance and earnest instructions.
error: swallowing psychology that sad
correction: swallow that sadness
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, the modal verb 〈will〉 should be followed by the base form of the verb. In the original sentence, 〈swallowing〉 is a non-finite verb form and cannot be paired with 〈will〉; it needs to be changed to the base form 『swallow』 to comply with grammatical requirements; ② Word Redundancy: In the original sentence, the word 〈psychology〉 is redundant here, which would make the expression cumbersome and the meaning unclear; deleting this word can make the sentence more concise and clear; ③ PoS Confusion Error: In the original sentence, 〈sad〉 is an adjective and cannot directly follow the preposition 〈that〉 as an object. According to English part-of-speech usage rules, it should be changed to the noun form 『sadness』 to make the sentence grammatically correct and semantically coherent.

error_sentence: The reason is that when the children get a little bit of success, my mother very happy, telling anyone speak, relish, because this is her pride; their children encounter wrong, mother will silently swallowing psychology that sad and regret, guidance and earnest instructions.
correct_sentence: When her children encounter mistakes, my mother will silently swallow that sadness and regret, offering guidance and earnest instructions.
correction: offering
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to English grammar and semantic needs, in the original sentence 〈mother will silently swallow psychology that sadness and regret, guidance and earnest instructions〉, when expressing the mother's action of “providing guidance and earnest instructions,” the corresponding verb is missing. To make the sentence complete, a verb meaning “provide” needs to be added; 『offering』 should be added before 〈guidance and earnest instructions〉 to clarify the mother's action and make the sentence semantically complete and coherent.

error_sentence: Mother never because of poverty and disease, and to abandon their children some ugly.
correct_sentence: Mothers never because of poverty, disease or ugliness abandon their children.
error: Mother
correction: Mothers
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈Mother〉 in the original sentence is in singular form and cannot express the generic meaning of “all mothers” here. To accurately convey the meaning and match the subject and verb forms, it should be changed to the plural form 『Mothers』, enabling the sentence to correctly express the generic concept of “mothers.”

error_sentence: Mother never because of poverty and disease, and to abandon their children some ugly.
correct_sentence: Mothers never because of poverty, disease or ugliness abandon their children.
error: and disease, and to
correction: , disease or ugliness
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: In the original sentence, "and disease, and to" involves repeated use of conjunctions, leading to redundancy; the repeated 〈and〉 should be deleted. Simultaneously, "some ugly" is semantically repetitive with the preceding "ugliness" and is grammatically incorrect; it should be deleted to make the sentence expression concise; ② Conjunction Error: The original sentence uses conjunctions improperly when listing parallel reasons such as "poverty," "disease," and "ugliness." Multiple parallel reasons should be connected by 『or』 to reflect a relationship of choice, and comma separation needs adjustment; 〈and〉 should be changed to 『or』 to make the sentence logic clear; ③ Noun Error: In the original sentence, "Mother" is in singular form and cannot express a generic meaning. According to the sentence's intended meaning of “all mothers,” it should be changed to the plural form 『Mothers』 to match the sentence subject with the semantics.

error_sentence: Mother never because of poverty and disease, and to abandon their children some ugly.
correct_sentence: Mothers never because of poverty, disease or ugliness abandon their children.
error: some ugly
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: In the original sentence, 〈some ugly〉 is semantically repetitive with the preceding 〈ugliness〉, and the grammatical use of 〈some ugly〉 is incorrect. To make the sentence concise and clear, deleting this redundant content 〈some ugly〉 can avoid semantic repetition and make the sentence expression clearer.

error_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, is the mother of the day and night, anxiety, anxiety, hate can not for her pain, for him.

correct_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, it is the mother who is anxious day and night, and hates can not take the pain, for him.

correction: it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence 〈is the mother of the day and night, anxiety, anxiety, hate can not for her pain, for him.〉 lacks a subject, making the sentence structure incomplete. 『it』 needs to be added to form the emphatic sentence pattern 〈it is... who〉, making the sentence structure complete and its meaning clear, emphasizing that “it is the mother” who is in a certain state when the child suffers.

error_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, is the mother of the day and night, anxiety, anxiety, hate can not for her pain, for him.

correct_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, it is the mother who is anxious day and night, and hates can not take the pain, for him.

error: of the
correction: who is anxious
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Relative Word Error: In the original sentence, 〈of the〉 cannot introduce an attributive clause and cannot reasonably modify "the mother." According to English grammar rules, it should be changed to the relative pronoun 『who』, and the predicate verb 『is anxious』 should be added, forming "who is anxious," enabling the sentence to correctly express the meaning “it is the mother who is anxious day and night,” conforming to the grammatical requirements of an attributive clause.

error_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, is the mother of the day and night, anxiety, anxiety, hate can not for her pain, for him.

correct_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, it is the mother who is anxious day and night, and hates can not take the pain, for him.

error: , anxiety, anxiety, hate
correction: , and hates
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Word Redundancy: In the original sentence, 〈anxiety, anxiety〉 is a repetitive expression, causing word redundancy; the repeated 〈anxiety〉 should be deleted to make the sentence expression concise and clear; ② Conjunction Error: In the original sentence, a conjunction is missing between 〈is anxious day and night〉 and 〈hate can not for her pain〉, leading to a loose sentence structure and incoherent logic. The conjunction 『and』 should be added to correctly connect the parallel predicates, making the sentence structure complete and semantically fluent.

error_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, is the mother of the day and night, anxiety, anxiety, hate can not for her pain, for him.

correct_sentence: When the child suffers from suffering and pain, it is the mother who is anxious day and night, and hates can not take the pain, for him.

error: for her
correction: take the
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: In the original sentence, the expression 〈for her pain〉 does not conform to English idiomatic collocations and its meaning is vague. According to English expression habits, it should be changed to the verb phrase 『take the pain』 to clearly express the meaning of “bear the pain,” making the sentence's meaning clear and accurate.

error_sentence: I am looking forward to the Chinese people to have their own mother's day, and set a statutory holiday.
correct_sentence: I am looking forward to the Chinese people having their own Mother's Day, and setting it as a statutory holiday.
error: to have
correction: having
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, "look forward to" is a fixed phrase where "to" is a preposition and should be followed by a gerund form. The use of the infinitive 〈to have〉 in the original sentence does not conform to grammatical rules; it should be changed to the gerund form 『having』 to make the sentence grammatically correct.

error_sentence: I am looking forward to the Chinese people to have their own mother's day, and set a statutory holiday.
correct_sentence: I am looking forward to the Chinese people having their own Mother's Day, and setting it as a statutory holiday.
error: mother's day
correction: Mother's Day
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, festival names are proper nouns, and their initial letters need to be capitalized. The writing of 〈mother's day〉 in the original sentence does not conform to conventions; it should be changed to 『Mother's Day』 to make the expression conform to standard writing habits.

error_sentence: I am looking forward to the Chinese people to have their own mother's day, and set a statutory holiday.
correct_sentence: I am looking forward to the Chinese people having their own Mother's Day, and setting it as a statutory holiday.
error: set
correction: setting it as
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, in the “look forward to” structure, “to” is a preposition and should be followed by a gerund form. In the original sentence, 〈set〉 is the base form of the verb, which does not meet the requirement; it should be changed to the gerund form 『setting』; ② Pronoun Error: In the original sentence, "set a statutory holiday" has an unclear meaning as it does not specify the object being set. The pronoun 『it』 should be added, referring to the preceding "Mother's Day," to make the sentence semantically complete and logically clear, i.e., "setting it as a statutory holiday."