Writing prompt: My Teacher

Student essay:
I believe that everyone has an ideal,the ideal of my childhood is a teacher.
Many people will say that when teachers are very tired,but also less pay,but this is a sacred work,some people think that teaching children is a wate of time but it is meaningful,because it is in the training of talent.
Ifeel very happy with the child,because it makes peopie feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.
Teachers are essential to the society,only the existence of our society will progress.
In short,the teacher is profession is sacred,they let us get the knowledge.

Corrected essay:
I believe that everyone has an ideal, and my ideal from childhood is to be a teacher.
Many people will say that being a teacher is very tiring and has less pay, but it is a sacred job. Some people think that teaching children is a waste of time, but it is meaningful, because it involves training talent.
I feel very happy with children, because they make me feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.
Teachers are essential to society. Only with their existence will our society progress.
In short, the teaching profession is sacred, and teachers let us gain knowledge.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I believe that everyone has an ideal,the ideal of my childhood is a teacher.

correct_sentence: I believe that everyone has an ideal, and my ideal from childhood is to be a teacher.

error: the ideal of my
correction: and my ideal from
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English rules for coordinate clauses, a conjunction is needed between the two independent clauses 〈I believe that everyone has an ideal,〉 and 〈the ideal of my childhood is a teacher.〉. Add the coordinating conjunction 『and』 after 〈ideal〉 to form a coordinate structure; ② Pronoun Error: According to English noun modification rules, 〈the ideal〉 is modified by the definite article 〈the〉, but this is insufficient to show possession. It should be changed to the possessive adjective 『my ideal』 to clearly express personal ideal; ③ Preposition Error: According to English idiomatic expressions for time adverbials, 〈of my childhood〉 is not a conventional collocation. Change it to 『from childhood』 to accurately express "from childhood"; ④ Word Redundancy Error: According to the principle of conciseness in English expression, the second 〈my〉 in “my ideal from my childhood” causes repetition. Delete it and keep 『my ideal from childhood』 to make the expression more concise.

error_sentence: I believe that everyone has an ideal,the ideal of my childhood is a teacher.

correct_sentence: I believe that everyone has an ideal, and my ideal from childhood is to be a teacher.

correction: to be
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English predicative structure rules, expressing the career goal "to be a teacher" requires an infinitive. Change 〈is a teacher〉 to 『is to be a teacher』, adding 『to be』, to conform to the standard structure "subject + be + to do".

error_sentence: Many people will say that when teachers are very tired,but also less pay,but this is a sacred work,some people think that teaching children is a wate of time but it is meaningful,because it is in the training of talent.

correct_sentence: Many people will say that being a teacher is very tiring and has less pay, but it is a sacred job.
error: when teachers are very tired,but also
correction: being a teacher is very tiring and has
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to English sentence structure rules, 〈when teachers are very tired〉 incorrectly uses a time adverbial clause and lacks a main clause part; it should be changed to a gerund structure 『being a teacher』 as the subject; ② Noun Number Error: According to English expression habits, the intention here is to express "being a teacher," so a singular noun should be used instead of "being some teachers." Therefore, 〈teachers〉 needs to be changed to 『a teacher』; ③ Subject-Verb Agreement Error: When a gerund is used as the subject, the predicate verb needs to be in the third-person singular form. Therefore, 〈are〉 in the original sentence should be changed to 『is』; ④ Adjective Error: According to adjective formation principles, 〈tired〉 in the original sentence is an adjective modifying people, meaning "exhausted." When the subject changes, it becomes "being a teacher" is "tiring," where the adjective modifies a thing. Therefore, 〈tired〉 needs to be changed to 『tiring』 to conform to adjective usage norms; ⑤ Conjunction Error: According to English coordinate structure rules, 〈but also〉 cannot connect simple predicates. Change it to 『and』 to connect two coordinate predicates, and the comma can be deleted; ⑥ Verb Choice Error: According to the original sentence structure, the intention here is to express "and the pay is also low." When "and" connects two independent main clauses, the second main clause lacks a predicate verb. Therefore, the verb "have" needs to be added after "and" to express "to have," and the predicate verb "have" needs to be consistent with the third-person singular form of the subject, finally changing to 『and has』.

error_sentence: Many people will say that when teachers are very tired,but also less pay,but this is a sacred work,some people think that teaching children is a wate of time but it is meaningful,because it is in the training of talent.

correct_sentence: Many people will say that being a teacher is very tiring and has less pay, but it is a sacred job.
error: this
correction: it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English reference rules, 〈this〉 meaning "this" has ambiguous reference. It should be changed to 『it』 to accurately refer back to the previously mentioned subject "the teaching profession".

error_sentence: Many people will say that when teachers are very tired,but also less pay,but this is a sacred work,some people think that teaching children is a wate of time but it is meaningful,because it is in the training of talent.

correct_sentence: Many people will say that being a teacher is very tiring and has less pay, but it is a sacred job. Some people think that teaching children is a waste of time, but it is meaningful, because it involves training talent.

error: work,some
correction: job. Some
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to English expression norms, 〈work〉 "work" tends to refer to work content. It should be replaced with 『job』 to denote "specific profession," to clearly express the sentence meaning "the teaching profession"; ② Punctuation Error: According to English sentence structure rules, two independent complete sentences 〈this is a sacred work〉 and 〈some people think...〉 must be separated by a period. Change the comma to a period to form a complete break; ③ Space Error: According to English punctuation usage norms, a period as an ending punctuation mark should have one space before the subsequent word. Change 〈job.Some〉 to 『job. Some』 (add space) to conform to writing standards; ④ Case Error: According to English rules for capitalizing the first letter of a sentence, the first word of the sentence 〈some〉 should be changed to 『Some』 (S capitalized) to conform to basic writing norms.

error_sentence: Many people will say that when teachers are very tired,but also less pay,but this is a sacred work,some people think that teaching children is a wate of time but it is meaningful,because it is in the training of talent.

correct_sentence: Some people think that teaching children is a waste of time, but it is meaningful, because it involves training talent.

error: wate
correction: waste
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English word formation, the intention here is to express the meaning of "waste." Therefore, it can be seen that 〈wate〉 has a vowel letter order error, i.e., a spelling error. The correct spelling should be 『waste』 to accurately express the meaning of "waste".

error_sentence: Many people will say that when teachers are very tired,but also less pay,but this is a sacred work,some people think that teaching children is a wate of time but it is meaningful,because it is in the training of talent.

correct_sentence: Some people think that teaching children is a waste of time, but it is meaningful, because it involves training talent.

correction: ,
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation rules for adverbial clauses, a comma + space character is needed for separation before a clause of reason. Add a space after 〈meaningful〉 to change it to 『, 』, forming the standard structure 『meaningful, because...』.

error_sentence: Many people will say that when teachers are very tired,but also less pay,but this is a sacred work,some people think that teaching children is a wate of time but it is meaningful,because it is in the training of talent.

correct_sentence: Some people think that teaching children is a waste of time, but it is meaningful, because it involves training talent.

error: is in the training of
correction: involves training
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to semantic collocation of verbs, 〈is〉 cannot accurately express the meaning of "involve." Change it to 『involves』 to correctly collocate with the object 〈training〉; ② Word Redundancy Error: According to English verb-object collocation habits, the prepositional phrase 〈in the training of〉 has a redundant structure. 〈in〉, 〈the〉, and 〈of〉 should be deleted, retaining only the non-finite verb 〈training〉, simplifying it to the verb phrase 『involves training』 to make the expression more accurate and concise.

error_sentence: Ifeel very happy with the child,because it makes peopie feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.

correct_sentence: I feel very happy with children, because they make me feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.

error: Ifeel
correction: I feel
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English word separation rules, 〈Ifeel〉 lacks the necessary interval between the subject and the predicate. Change it to 『I feel』 (add space) to conform to standard writing format.

error_sentence: Ifeel very happy with the child,because it makes peopie feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.

correct_sentence: I feel very happy with children, because they make me feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.

error: the child
correction: children
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English determiner usage norms, when referring generically, a definite article should not be used to modify a noun. Therefore, delete the redundant definite article 〈the〉 to conform to grammatical norms; ② Noun Number Error: According to the contextual semantics, a teacher's work involves multiple students. Therefore, change the singular form 〈the child〉 to the plural form 『children』 to accurately reflect the actual situation.

error_sentence: Ifeel very happy with the child,because it makes peopie feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.

correct_sentence: I feel very happy with children, because they make me feel very young and full of vigor and vitality.

error: it makes peopie
correction: they make me
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to the English principle of pronoun agreement, the plural subject 〈children〉 requires a plural pronoun for reference. Change the singular 〈it〉 to 『they』; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English subject-verb agreement rules, the predicate verb corresponding to the plural subject 〈they〉 should be in the plural form. Change the singular 〈makes〉 to 『make』; ③ Pronoun Error: Firstly, according to the original sentence, 〈peopie〉 here is a spelling error and its reference is unclear. According to the sentence meaning, it should be changed to the first person 『me』 to clearly express personal feelings.

error_sentence: Teachers are essential to the society,only the existence of our society will progress.

correct_sentence: Teachers are essential to society. Only with their existence will our society progress.

error: the society,only the existence of
correction: society. Only with their existence will
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English determiner usage, the noun "society" does not require the determiner "the" before it. Therefore, 〈the〉 needs to be deleted, changing to 『Teachers are essential to society』; ② Punctuation Error: According to the original text, 〈Teachers are essential to the society〉 and 〈only the existence of our society will progress.〉 are two independent main clauses and cannot be connected by a comma. They need to be separated by a period, i.e., modified to 『society. Only』; ③ Space Error: According to English written expression norms, a space of one letter needs to be maintained between a punctuation mark (comma or period) and the following word. Therefore, a space needs to be added and changed to 『. Only』; ④ Case Error: According to English written expression norms, the first letter of the first word of a sentence needs to be capitalized. Therefore, 〈only〉 needs to be changed to 『Only』; ⑤ Preposition Error: According to the original sentence structure, an inverted sentence structure is intended here, but 〈only the existence of...〉 lacks the preposition 『with』. It should be added to make the inverted structure more complete, i.e., changed to 『Only with their existence will』; ⑥ Pronoun Error: According to the original sentence meaning, 〈existence〉 needs to be modified by a determiner or a possessive adjective. However, using 〈the〉 results in unclear reference and does not clearly indicate possession. Therefore, it needs to be changed to 『their』 to make the reference clear; ⑦ Word Redundancy Error: The original sentence uses the prepositional phrase structure "the existence of." After adjustment to express "our society will be better with their existence," 〈existence〉 is already modified by the possessive adjective 『their』, and the extra preposition "of" is not needed to indicate possession. Therefore, 〈of〉 should be deleted; ⑧ Word Order Error: According to the inverted sentence structure, 〈will〉 in the original sentence needs to be moved before the real subject 〈our society〉 to conform to the inverted sentence structure. Therefore, it should be modified to 『Only with their existence will our society...』.

error_sentence: Teachers are essential to the society,only the existence of our society will progress.

correct_sentence: Only with their existence will our society progress.

error: will
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English inverted sentence structure rules, after the auxiliary verb 〈will〉 is fronted, it does not need to appear again later. Delete the redundant 〈will〉 at the end of the sentence to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In short,the teacher is profession is sacred,they let us get the knowledge.
correct_sentence: In short, the teaching profession is sacred, and teachers let us gain knowledge.
error: teacher is
correction: teaching
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to English modification rules, the noun 〈teacher〉 cannot directly modify a noun. Change it to the gerund 『teaching』 to form the correct collocation 『teaching profession』; ② Word Redundancy Error: According to English syntactic expression norms, only one predicate verb is allowed in a complete sentence. When "the teaching profession" is the subject, the predicate verb 〈is〉 in the phrase 〈the teacher is profession〉 needs to be deleted to conform to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: In short,the teacher is profession is sacred,they let us get the knowledge.
correct_sentence: In short, the teaching profession is sacred, and teachers let us gain knowledge.
error: they
correction: and teachers
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English rules for coordinate clauses, a conjunction is needed between two clauses. Therefore, 『and』 needs to be added between 〈the teaching profession is sacred,〉 and 〈teachers let us gain knowledge.〉 to achieve semantic coherence; ② Noun Error: According to the English principle of clear reference, the pronoun 〈they〉 appearing in the original sentence has ambiguous reference. Change it to the explicit noun 『teachers』 as the subject to maintain sentence coherence.

error_sentence: In short,the teacher is profession is sacred,they let us get the knowledge.
correct_sentence: In short, the teaching profession is sacred, and teachers let us gain knowledge.
error: get the
correction: gain
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to English verb-object collocation habits, 〈get the knowledge〉 is not accurate enough. Change it to the more idiomatic 『gain knowledge』 to express the semantic meaning of "acquiring knowledge"; ② Determiner Error: According to English usage of uncountable nouns, when 〈knowledge〉 refers generically to "knowledge," it does not require an article for modification. Delete the redundant 『the』 to conform to English expression habits.