Writing prompt: Care About the Environment

Student essay:
There is such a great increase in population that the environmental carving capacity have reached its limit.What's more,overdevelopment of natural resources has a negative effect on the environment.Besides,Many coutries are lacking in water resources,which makes it hard for people to have access to safe drinking water.In addition,cutting down trees is creasing the evenironment.Many place has serious air pollution,water pollution and so on.
We must take action to protect the environment.Firstly,we should find new environmentally friendly energy,such as solar power. Secondly,we should control the number of people.Thirdly,It's necessaral to strengthen international cooperation.

Corrected essay:
There is such a great increase in population that the environmental carrying capacity has reached its limit. What's more, the overdevelopment of natural resources has a negative effect on the environment. Besides, many countries are lacking in water resources, which makes it hard for people to have access to safe drinking water. In addition, cutting down trees is damaging the environment. Many places have serious air pollution, water pollution and so on.
We must take action to protect the environment. Firstly, we should find new environmentally friendly energy, such as solar power. Secondly, we should control the number of people. Thirdly, it's necessary to strengthen international cooperation.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: There is such a great increase in population that the environmental carving capacity have reached its limit.
correct_sentence: There is such a great increase in population that the environmental carrying capacity has reached its limit.
error: carving capacity have
correction: carrying capacity has
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express "carrying", so 〈carving〉 is a misspelling of 『carrying』, and needs to be changed to 『carrying』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Subject-verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, there is a subject-verb agreement error in the original sentence. The subject 〈capacity〉 is singular, and the verb 〈have〉 in the original sentence is in the plural form. Therefore, the verb 〈have〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『has』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: What's more,overdevelopment of natural resources has a negative effect on the environment.
correct_sentence: What's more, the overdevelopment of natural resources has a negative effect on the environment.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity. In the original sentence, 〈overdevelopment〉 refers to a specific phenomenon of overdevelopment, so 『the』 needs to be added before 〈overdevelopment〉 to clarify the meaning.

error_sentence: Besides,Many coutries are lacking in water resources,which makes it hard for people to have access to safe drinking water.
correct_sentence: Besides, many countries are lacking in water resources, which makes it hard for people to have access to safe drinking water.
error: Many coutries
correction: many countries
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Case Error: The first letter of a word not at the beginning of a sentence does not need to be capitalized. In the original sentence, 〈Many〉 is not at the beginning of the sentence and does not need to be capitalized, so 〈Many〉 needs to be changed to 『many』 to conform to the standard; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express "countries", so 〈coutries〉 is a misspelling of 『countries』, and needs to be changed to 『countries』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: In addition,cutting down trees is creasing the evenironment.
correct_sentence: In addition, cutting down trees is damaging the environment.
error: creasing the evenironment
correction: damaging the environment
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means "damaging". In the original sentence, 〈creasing〉 means "to make a line or fold", which does not fit the meaning. Therefore, 〈creasing〉 needs to be changed to 『damaging』 to fit the context; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express "environment", so 〈evenironment〉 is a misspelling of 『environment』, and needs to be changed to 『environment』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Many place has serious air pollution,water pollution and so on.

correct_sentence: Many places have serious air pollution, water pollution and so on.

error: place has
correction: places have
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈Many place〉 in the original sentence should use the plural form 『Many places』 to indicate multiple locations. Therefore, 〈Many place〉 should be changed to 『Many places』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: Thirdly,It's necessaral to strengthen international cooperation.
correct_sentence: Thirdly, it's necessary to strengthen international cooperation.
error: It's necessaral
correction: it's necessary
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Case Error: The first letter of a word not at the beginning of a sentence does not need to be capitalized. In the original sentence, 〈It's〉 is not at the beginning of the sentence and does not need to be capitalized, so 〈It's〉 needs to be changed to 『it's』 to conform to the standard; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express "necessary", so 〈necessaral〉 is a misspelling of 『necessary』, and needs to be changed to 『necessary』 to make the sentence coherent.