Writing prompt: My Spring Festival

Student essay:
The Spring Festival which is celebrated on February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays. It lasts about fifteen days, during the festival people do not work except for the workers on duty. Students don't go to school, and shops are closed.
Because of this reason, we had to buy some necessary food a week ahead of time. Besides we did some cleaning so that it might bring us good luck. Further more on New Year's Eve, we got together ate dumplings and watch Spring Festival Gala. In addition it's excited for children to explode fireworks. What's more children like me received lucky money from our family. The next few days, I called on my relatives for the new year.
In general thanks to the Spring Festival I knew more about Chinese customs and became more polite. Thus I think it's meaningful to celebrate this traditional festival.

Corrected essay:
The Spring Festival, which is celebrated in February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays. It lasts about fifteen days. During the festival, people do not work except for the workers on duty. Students don't go to school, and shops are closed.
Because of this reason, we had to buy some necessary food a week ahead of time. Besides, we did some cleaning so that it might bring us good luck. Furthermore, on New Year's Eve, we got together, ate dumplings, and watched the Spring Festival Gala. In addition, it's exciting for children to explode fireworks. What's more, children like me received lucky money from our family. In the next few days, I called on my relatives for the new year.
In general, thanks to the Spring Festival, I know more about Chinese customs and became more polite. Thus, I think it's meaningful to celebrate this traditional festival.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The Spring Festival which is celebrated on February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays.
correct_sentence: The Spring Festival, which is celebrated in February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, the non-restrictive relative clause 〈which is celebrated on February〉 needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, a comma should be added after 〈The Spring Festival〉 to form 『, which』, changing it to 『The Spring Festival, which is celebrated in February』.

error_sentence: The Spring Festival which is celebrated on February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays.
correct_sentence: The Spring Festival, which is celebrated in February is one of the most important traditional Chinese holidays.
error: on
correction: in
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The preposition before a month should be 〈in〉, not 〈on〉. According to English rules for expressing time, 〈on February〉 is corrected to 『in February』 to meet grammatical requirements.

error_sentence: It lasts about fifteen days, during the festival people do not work except for the workers on duty.
correct_sentence: It lasts about fifteen days. During the festival, people do not work except for the workers on duty.
error: , during
correction: . During
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The original sentence has a comma splice error. The two independent clauses 〈It lasts about fifteen days〉 and 〈during...〉 need to be separated by a period. Therefore, the connecting comma 〈, during〉 is changed to a period 『. During』 to form complete sentences; ② Case Error: According to English expression norms, the first word of the sentence 〈during〉 should be capitalized as 『During』 to comply with the English rule of capitalizing the first letter of a sentence.

error_sentence: It lasts about fifteen days, during the festival people do not work except for the workers on duty.
correct_sentence: During the festival, people do not work except for the workers on duty.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When the adverbial phrase 〈during the festival〉 is at the beginning of the main clause, according to English punctuation rules, it needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added, forming the correct structure 『During the festival,』.

error_sentence: Besides we did some cleaning so that it might bring us good luck.
correct_sentence: Besides, we did some cleaning so that it might bring us good luck.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The adverb 〈Besides〉 at the beginning of the sentence, acting as a transition word, needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma according to English writing conventions. Therefore, a comma is added to form 『Besides,』, correcting it to 『Besides,』.

error_sentence: Further more on New Year's Eve, we got together ate dumplings and watch Spring Festival Gala.
correct_sentence: Furthermore, on New Year's Eve, we got together, ate dumplings, and watched the Spring Festival Gala.
error: Further more
correction: Furthermore,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Space Error: 〈Further more〉 is misspelled; according to English adverb rules, it should be combined into 『Furthermore』 (no space) to mean 'in addition', conforming to the correct form; ② Punctuation Error: When the conjunctive adverb 〈Furthermore〉 is at the beginning of a sentence, according to English writing conventions, it needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added, forming the correct structure 『Furthermore,』.

error_sentence: Further more on New Year's Eve, we got together ate dumplings and watch Spring Festival Gala.
correct_sentence: Furthermore, on New Year's Eve, we got together, ate dumplings, and watched the Spring Festival Gala.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When the time adverbial 〈on New Year's Eve〉 is at the beginning of the sentence, according to English punctuation rules, it needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, a 『,』 is added, correcting it to 『On New Year's Eve,』.

error_sentence: Further more on New Year's Eve, we got together ate dumplings and watch Spring Festival Gala.
correct_sentence: Furthermore, on New Year's Eve, we got together, ate dumplings, and watched the Spring Festival Gala.
error: and watch
correction: , and watched the
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English rules for parallel structure, a connecting comma 『, and』 needs to be added after listing the action 〈ate dumplings〉 to maintain sentence structure coherence, changing it to 『ate dumplings, and』; ② Verb Tense Error: The original verb 〈watch〉 is inconsistent with the preceding past tense verbs. According to the principle of tense consistency, it should be changed to the past tense 『watched』, forming 『watched the Spring Festival Gala』; ③ Determiner Error: When the proper noun event name 〈Spring Festival Gala〉 is used as a specific event, according to English grammar rules, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added, correcting it to 『the Spring Festival Gala』.

error_sentence: In addition it's excited for children to explode fireworks.
correct_sentence: In addition, it's exciting for children to explode fireworks.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When the transition phrase 〈In addition〉 is at the beginning of a sentence, according to English writing conventions, it needs to be separated by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added to form 『In addition,』 to separate the connective phrase from the subsequent content, making the sentence structure clear.

error_sentence: In addition it's excited for children to explode fireworks.
correct_sentence: In addition, it's exciting for children to explode fireworks.
error: excited
correction: exciting
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adjective Error: The original adjective 〈excited〉 (feeling excited) improperly modifies the subject 〈it〉. According to adjective usage rules, to describe the nature of something, 『exciting』 (causing excitement) should be used to conform to semantic rules.

error_sentence: What's more children like me received lucky money from our family.
correct_sentence: What's more, children like me received lucky money from our family.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When the transition phrase 〈What's more〉 is at the beginning of a sentence, according to English punctuation rules, it needs to be separated by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added to form 『What's more,』 to separate the connective phrase from the subsequent content, making the sentence structure clear.

error_sentence: The next few days, I called on my relatives for the new year.

correct_sentence: In the next few days, I called on my relatives for the new year.

error: The
correction: In the
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: The time adverbial 〈the next few days〉 is missing a necessary preposition. According to English conventions for expressing time, 『In』 should be added to form 『In the next few days』 to indicate a specific time frame; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized; thus 〈The〉 is replaced by 『In the』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: In general thanks to the Spring Festival I knew more about Chinese customs and became more polite.
correct_sentence: In general, thanks to the Spring Festival, I know more about Chinese customs and became more polite.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When the transition phrase 〈In general〉 is at the beginning of a sentence, according to English punctuation rules, it needs to be separated by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added to form 『In general,』 to separate the connective phrase from the subsequent content, making the sentence structure clear.

error_sentence: In general thanks to the Spring Festival I knew more about Chinese customs and became more polite.
correct_sentence: In general, thanks to the Spring Festival, I know more about Chinese customs and became more polite.
error: I knew
correction: , I know
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The adverbial clause of reason 〈thanks to the Spring Festival〉 needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. According to English punctuation rules, a comma is added to form 『thanks to the Spring Festival, I know』 to match the current time context; ② Verb Tense Error: The original verb 〈I knew〉 uses the past tense, which is inconsistent with the current declarative context. According to the principle of time consistency, it should be changed to the present tense 『I know』 to maintain tense uniformity.

error_sentence: Thus I think it's meaningful to celebrate this traditional festival.
correct_sentence: Thus, I think it's meaningful to celebrate this traditional festival.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: When the transition word 〈Thus〉 is at the beginning of a sentence, according to English punctuation rules, it needs to be separated by a comma. Therefore, a comma is added to form 『Thus,』 to separate the connective word from the subsequent content, making the sentence structure clear.