Writing prompt: My Dreaming Destination in Europe

Student essay:
Compared with other developed country in Europe,my dreaming destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland,with the population of 750 million,is situated in central Europe.The beautiful country covers an area of 41 thousand square kilometres.As the Swiss capital,Berne is treated as the most important city of international meetings.It also has a world-renown city called Geneva.
Over the years,the country landscape has been praised by millions of tourists,who call it "The World Garden". On the other hand,the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little,especially in the watches,chemistry and food industry.
Switzerland is a popular starting point for many excursions.It is my dreaming destination all the time.

Corrected essay:
Compared with other developed countries in Europe, my dream destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland, with a population of 7.5 million, is situated in central Europe. The beautiful country covers an area of 41 thousand square kilometres. As the Swiss capital, Berne is treated as the most important city for international meetings. It also has a world-renowned city called Geneva.
Over the years, the country's landscape has been praised by millions of tourists, who call it "The World Garden." On the other hand, the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little, especially in the watches, chemical and food industries.
Switzerland is a popular starting point for many excursions. It has always been my dreaming destination.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Compared with other developed country in Europe,my dreaming destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland,with the population of 750 million,is situated in central Europe.
correct_sentence: Compared with other developed countries in Europe, my dream destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland, with a population of 7.5 million, is situated in central Europe.
error: country
correction: countries
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈country〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『countries』 to be consistent with “multiple countries” in the context, therefore 〈country〉 should be changed to 『countries』 to conform to English grammar rules.

error_sentence: Compared with other developed country in Europe,my dreaming destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland,with the population of 750 million,is situated in central Europe.
correct_sentence: Compared with other developed countries in Europe, my dream destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland, with a population of 7.5 million, is situated in central Europe.
error: dreaming
correction: dream
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈dreaming〉 is the present participle form of a verb, while a noun is needed here as an attributive to modify 〈destination〉, it should be changed to 『dream』, therefore 〈dreaming〉 needs to be modified to 『dream』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: Compared with other developed country in Europe,my dreaming destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland,with the population of 750 million,is situated in central Europe.
correct_sentence: Compared with other developed countries in Europe, my dream destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland, with a population of 7.5 million, is situated in central Europe.
error: the
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; in the original sentence, 〈population〉 refers to a specific population figure already mentioned, therefore 〈a〉 needs to be changed to 『the』 to clarify the meaning.

error_sentence: Compared with other developed country in Europe,my dreaming destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland,with the population of 750 million,is situated in central Europe.
correct_sentence: Compared with other developed countries in Europe, my dream destination is Switzerland.
Switzerland, with a population of 7.5 million, is situated in central Europe.
error: 750
correction: 7.5
error_type: Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Number Error: According to the context, the actual population of Switzerland is approximately 8.7 million; 〈750 million〉 is a serious data error and needs to be corrected to a reasonable value 『7.5 million』 to conform to common sense.

error_sentence: As the Swiss capital,Berne is treated as the most important city of international meetings.
correct_sentence: As the Swiss capital, Berne is treated as the most important city for international meetings.
error: of
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, 『for』 is used to indicate the functional attribute of a city, while 〈of〉 indicates a possessive relationship; therefore, 〈of〉 needs to be changed to 『for』 to correctly express the purpose relationship.

error_sentence: It also has a world-renown city called Geneva.

correct_sentence: It also has a world-renowned city called Geneva.

error: renown
correction: renowned
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈renown〉 is a noun, while an adjective is needed here to describe the nature of the city; it should be changed to the adjective 『renowned』, therefore 〈renown〉 needs to be modified to 『renowned』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: Over the years,the country landscape has been praised by millions of tourists,who call it "The World Garden".
correct_sentence: Over the years, the country's landscape has been praised by millions of tourists, who call it "The World Garden."
correction: 's
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Possessive Error: According to English grammar rules and the prompt requirements, the meaning here is “the country's landscape”; in the original sentence, 〈country landscape〉 needs to use the possessive form to indicate its possessed item, therefore 〈country landscape〉 is modified to 『country's landscape』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: Over the years,the country landscape has been praised by millions of tourists,who call it "The World Garden".
correct_sentence: Over the years, the country's landscape has been praised by millions of tourists, who call it "The World Garden."
error: ".
correction: ."
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, the period of a direct quotation should be placed inside the quotation marks, therefore 〈".〉 is modified to 『."』 to conform to English quotation mark usage rules.

error_sentence: On the other hand,the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little,especially in the watches,chemistry and food industry.

correct_sentence: On the other hand, the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little, especially in the watches, chemical and food industries.

error: chemistry
correction: chemical
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈chemistry〉 is a noun, while an adjective is needed here to modify 〈industry〉, therefore 〈chemistry〉 in the original text needs to be modified to 『chemical』 to conform to grammar rules.

error_sentence: On the other hand,the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little,especially in the watches,chemistry and food industry.

correct_sentence: On the other hand, the industrialisation of Switzerland has increased little by little, especially in the watches, chemical and food industries.

error: industry
correction: industries
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈industry〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『industries』 to be consistent with “multiple industries” in the context, therefore 〈industry〉 should be changed to 『industries』 to conform to English grammar rules.

error_sentence: It is my dreaming destination all the time.
correct_sentence: It has always been my dreaming destination.
error: is
correction: has always been
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the present perfect tense should be used here, while 〈is〉 in the original sentence is in the simple present tense, therefore 〈is〉 needs to be changed to the present perfect tense 『has always been』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: It is my dreaming destination all the time.
correct_sentence: It has always been my dreaming destination.
error: all the time
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the context, 〈all the time〉 redundantly expresses a “continuous state” in the sentence, therefore it is necessary to delete the redundant part 〈all the time〉 to make the sentence more concise and fluent.