Writing prompt: The Advantages and Disadvantages of Private Cars

Student essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying private cars.When it bring us convenience also bring something we don't want.Example it make the environment more and more bad and cause the traffic jam.It's make people become more lazy than before.It's not good for our health.But in the other hand,it make our life more convenience than we don't have it.Peoleo who want to go to the distance can choose to drive private car.It maybe more free.Or when you have something urgent,you can drive your car.
The privent cars have two face,on the one hand is good,on the other hand is bad.we should use the privent car in appropriate time.

Corrected essay:
As the standard of living is getting higher, more and more people are buying private cars. When it brings us convenience, it also brings something we don't want. For example, it makes the environment worse and causes traffic jams. It makes people become lazier than before. It's not good for our health. But on the other hand, it makes our life more convenient than when we don't have it. People who want to travel long distances can choose to drive a private car. It may be more freeing. Or when you have something urgent, you can drive your car.
Private cars have two sides: on the one hand, they are good. On the other hand, they are bad. We should use private cars in appropriate time.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: When it bring us convenience also bring something we don't want.
correct_sentence: When it brings us convenience, it also brings something we don't want.
error: bring
correction: brings
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈it〉 is third-person singular, and the original predicate 〈bring〉 is in the third-person plural form, so the verb 〈bring〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『brings』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: When it bring us convenience also bring something we don't want.
correct_sentence: When it brings us convenience, it also brings something we don't want.
error: also bring
correction: , it also brings
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a comma is needed to connect the time adverbial clause 〈When〉 with the main clause, so 〈also〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to 『, it also』 to conform to grammar; ② Pronoun Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express that “it” refers to the preceding text, but the original sentence lacks the relevant pronoun, so 『it』 needs to be added to indicate this reference and conform to the context; ③ Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈it〉 is third-person singular, and the original predicate 〈bring〉 is in the third-person plural form, so the verb 〈bring〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『brings』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: Example it make the environment more and more bad and cause the traffic jam.
correct_sentence: For example, it makes the environment worse and causes traffic jams.
error: Example it make
correction: For example, it makes
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English expression habits, the meaning here is “for example,” so 〈Example〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to 『For example』 to conform to idiomatic expression; ② Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, a comma is needed after 『For example』 to separate it from the main clause for clarity of sentence structure, so 〈Example〉 is modified to 『For example,』 to conform to norms; ③ Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈it〉 is third-person singular, and the original predicate 〈make〉 is in the third-person plural form, so the verb 〈make〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『makes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: Example it make the environment more and more bad and cause the traffic jam.
correct_sentence: For example, it makes the environment worse and causes traffic jams.
error: more and more bad and cause the traffic jam
correction: worse and causes traffic jams
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Adjective Error: According to English expression habits, the comparative form of 〈bad〉 should be 『worse』, not 〈more and more bad〉, so 〈more and more bad〉 needs to be changed to 『worse』 to conform to habit; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈it〉 is third-person singular, and the original predicate 〈cause〉 is in the third-person plural form, so the verb 〈cause〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『causes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement; ③ Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, no article is needed before a plural countable noun in a general sense; the original phrase 〈the traffic jam〉 does not need 〈the〉, so the phrase is modified to 『causes traffic jams』 to conform to English grammar rules; ④ Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules and context, the meaning here is “traffic jams” in a general sense, so the plural form of the noun should be used, thus 〈traffic jam〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『traffic jams』 to conform to the context.

error_sentence: It's make people become more lazy than before.
correct_sentence: It makes people become lazier than before.
error: 's make
correction: makes
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, the original phrase 〈's make〉 has a redundant linking verb; the be-verb appearing alone means “is/exists,” so 〈's〉 should be deleted, and the phrase changed to 『It makes』 to conform to English grammar.

error_sentence: It's make people become more lazy than before.
correct_sentence: It makes people become lazier than before.
error: more lazy
correction: lazier
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adjective Error: According to English grammar rules, the comparative form of the adjective in the original sentence is incorrect; 〈more lazy〉 does not conform to the comparative rule for single-syllable adjectives, so 〈more lazy〉 needs to be changed to 『lazier』 to correctly express the comparison.

error_sentence: But in the other hand,it make our life more convenience than we don't have it.
correct_sentence: But on the other hand, it makes our life more convenient than when we don't have it.
error: in
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “on the other hand”; the preposition 〈in〉 in the original sentence is incorrect, so 〈in the other hand〉 needs to be changed to 『on the other hand』 to conform to idiomatic expression and context.

error_sentence: But in the other hand,it make our life more convenience than we don't have it.
correct_sentence: But on the other hand, it makes our life more convenient than when we don't have it.
error: make
correction: makes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈it〉 is third-person singular, and the original predicate 〈make〉 is in the third-person plural form, so the verb 〈make〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『makes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: But in the other hand,it make our life more convenience than we don't have it.
correct_sentence: But on the other hand, it makes our life more convenient than when we don't have it.
error: convenience than
correction: convenient than when
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈convenience〉 is a noun, while an adjective is needed here to describe life; it should be changed to the adjective 『convenient』, so 〈convenience〉 needs to be changed to 『convenient』 to conform to the context; ② Conjunction Error: According to the context, the intention is to express “when...”, but the original sentence lacks a conjunction to introduce the time adverbial clause, so 『when』 needs to be added to the original sentence to clarify the time comparison.

error_sentence: Peoleo who want to go to the distance can choose to drive private car.
correct_sentence: People who want to travel long distances can choose to drive a private car.
error: Peoleo
correction: People
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention is to express “people,” so 〈Peoleo〉 is a misspelling of 『People』; 〈Peoleo〉 needs to be changed to 『People』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Peoleo who want to go to the distance can choose to drive private car.
correct_sentence: People who want to travel long distances can choose to drive a private car.
error: go to the distance
correction: travel long distances
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence here means “to travel to distant places”; 〈go to the distance〉 in the original sentence does not fit the meaning, so 〈go to the distance〉 needs to be changed to 『travel long distances』 to conform to the context; ② Adjective Error: According to the context, the intention is to express “distant places”; the original 〈distance〉 lacks an adjective to express “long,” so it is modified to 『long distances』 to express long distance; ③ Noun Number Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “distant places” in a general sense, so the plural form of the noun should be used, thus 〈distance〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『distances』 to conform to the context.

error_sentence: Peoleo who want to go to the distance can choose to drive private car.
correct_sentence: People who want to travel long distances can choose to drive a private car.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the indefinite article 『a』 is needed before a singular countable noun 〈car〉 used in a general sense, so 〈drive private car〉 is modified to 『drive a private car』 to conform to English habit.

error_sentence: It maybe more free.
correct_sentence: It may be more freeing.
error: maybe more free
correction: may be more freeing
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈maybe〉 is an adverb, while “modal verb + base form of verb” is needed here to express possibility, so 〈maybe〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to 『may be』 to conform to the context; ② Adjective Error: According to the context, the intention is to express “very freeing”; the original 〈free〉 means “at no cost,” so 〈free〉 needs to be changed to 『freeing』 to conform to the context.

error_sentence: The privent cars have two face,on the one hand is good,on the other hand is bad.we should use the privent car in appropriate time.
correct_sentence: Private cars have two sides: on the one hand, they are good.
error: The privent
correction: Private
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the article 〈The〉 cannot be used to modify the plural noun 〈cars〉, so 〈The〉 needs to be deleted to conform to English grammar; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention is to express “private,” so 〈privent〉 is a misspelling of 『Private』; 〈privent〉 needs to be changed to 『Private』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: The privent cars have two face,on the one hand is good,on the other hand is bad.we should use the privent car in appropriate time.
correct_sentence: Private cars have two sides: on the one hand, they are good.
error: face,
correction: sides:
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “sides”; 〈face〉 means “countenance,” which does not fit the context, so 〈face〉 needs to be changed to 『sides』 to conform to the context; ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, a colon 『:』 is used to introduce specific explanations, so the comma 〈,〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to 『:』 to conform to norms.

error_sentence: The privent cars have two face,on the one hand is good,on the other hand is bad.we should use the privent car in appropriate time.
correct_sentence: Private cars have two sides: on the one hand, they are good. On the other hand, they are bad.
error: is good,on
correction: , they are good. On
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, 〈on the one hand〉 in the original sentence, as an independent element, needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈on the one hand〉 to conform to English punctuation usage norms; ② Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “they are good”; the main clause of the original phrase 〈on the one hand is good〉 lacks the subject 『they』, so 〈on the one hand is good〉 needs to be changed to 『on the one hand, they are good.』 to conform to the context; ③ Punctuation Error: According to writing conventions, a complete sentence requires a period. The original phrase 〈on the one hand is good〉 is structurally complete but lacks a period at the end. Therefore, it is modified to 『on the one hand, they are good. On』 to conform to English punctuation usage norms.

error_sentence: The privent cars have two face,on the one hand is good,on the other hand is bad.we should use the privent car in appropriate time.
correct_sentence: On the other hand, they are bad. We should use private cars in appropriate time.
error: is bad.we
correction: , they are bad. We
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “they are bad”; the main clause of the original phrase 〈on the other hand is bad〉 lacks the subject 『they』, so 〈on the other hand is bad〉 needs to be changed to 『On the other hand, they are bad』 to conform to the context; ③ Punctuation Error: According to writing conventions, a complete sentence requires a period. The original phrase 〈on the other hand is bad〉 is structurally complete but lacks a period at the end. Therefore, it is modified to 『On the other hand, they are bad. We』 to conform to English punctuation usage norms.

error_sentence: The privent cars have two face,on the one hand is good,on the other hand is bad.we should use the privent car in appropriate time.
correct_sentence: We should use private cars in appropriate time.
error: the privent car
correction: private cars
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the article 〈the〉 cannot be used to modify the plural noun 『cars』 in a general sense, so 〈the〉 needs to be deleted to conform to English grammar; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention is to express “private,” so 〈privent〉 is a misspelling of 『private』; 〈privent〉 needs to be changed to 『private』 to make the sentence coherent; ③ Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules and context, the meaning here is “cars” in a general sense, so the plural form of the noun should be used, thus 〈car〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『cars』 to conform to the context.