Writing prompt: The Discussions of Beauty Contests

Student essay:
Everything has two sides and the thing that beauty contests be held among teenagers is not an exception. It has both advantages and disadvantages. Some students think that like beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provied a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and help them know how to select clothes in important public. However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances will lead to run blindly after appearances. In addition, it is a waste of time and money to participate in.
As far as I am concerned, I believe that inner beauty is more important. Consequently, I suggest that everyone should focus more on inner beauty.

Corrected essay:
Everything has two sides and the idea that beauty contests can be held among teenagers is not an exception. It has both advantages and disadvantages. Some students think that liking beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provides a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and helps them know how to select clothes for important public occasions. However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances, it will lead to blindly chasing of appearances. In addition, it is a waste of time and money to participate in.
As far as I am concerned, I believe that inner beauty is more important. Consequently, I suggest that everyone should focus more on inner beauty.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Everything has two sides and the thing that beauty contests be held among teenagers is not an exception.
correct_sentence: Everything has two sides and the idea that beauty contests can be held among teenagers is not an exception.
error: thing
correction: idea
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: The noun 〈thing〉 is vague and inaccurate in this context; it should be replaced with the more semantically appropriate 『idea』 to clearly indicate the abstract concept of the discussion topic, therefore 〈thing〉 is changed to 『idea』 to correctly express the sentence's meaning.

error_sentence: Everything has two sides and the thing that beauty contests be held among teenagers is not an exception.
correct_sentence: Everything has two sides and the idea that beauty contests can be held among teenagers is not an exception.
correction: can
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Auxiliary Error: The sentence lacks 〈can〉 as an auxiliary verb to express possibility, therefore 『can』 is added after 〈contests〉 to make the sentence structure complete and semantically clear.

error_sentence: Some students think that like beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provied a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and help them know how to select clothes in important public.
correct_sentence: Some students think that liking beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provides a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and helps them know how to select clothes for important public occasions.
error: like
correction: liking
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the subject of a sentence is an action or behavior, the subject needs to be in the gerund form, therefore 〈like〉 is changed to the gerund 『liking』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Some students think that like beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provied a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and help them know how to select clothes in important public.
correct_sentence: Some students think that liking beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provides a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and helps them know how to select clothes for important public occasions.
error: provied
correction: provides
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence's meaning, it is understood that the intention here is to express 'provide' in the third-person singular form, therefore 〈provied〉 is a misspelling of 『provides』; it needs to be changed from 〈provied〉 to 『provides』 to make the sentence flow smoothly.

error_sentence: Some students think that like beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provied a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and help them know how to select clothes in important public.
correct_sentence: Some students think that liking beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provides a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and helps them know how to select clothes for important public occasions.
error: help
correction: helps
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈it〉 is third-person singular and requires the third-person singular form of the verb, therefore 〈help〉 is changed to 『helps』 to comply with subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: Some students think that like beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provied a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and help them know how to select clothes in important public.
correct_sentence: Some students think that liking beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provides a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and helps them know how to select clothes for important public occasions.
error: in
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: This part expresses the meaning of 'choosing clothes for important occasions'; the preposition 『for』, indicating purpose, should be used, therefore 〈in〉 is changed to 『for』 to correctly express the sentence's meaning.

error_sentence: Some students think that like beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provied a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and help them know how to select clothes in important public.
correct_sentence: Some students think that liking beauty is a basic mind of people, and it provides a stage to show teenagers' tastes, and helps them know how to select clothes for important public occasions.
correction: occasions
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: A noun needs to be added after the adjective 〈public〉 to form a complete noun phrase; the meaning here is 'important public occasions', therefore 『occasions』 is added after 〈public〉 to correctly express the sentence's meaning.

error_sentence: However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances will lead to run blindly after appearances.
correct_sentence: However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances, it will lead to blindly chasing of appearances.
correction: , it
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence's logic is confused; considering the context, it is understood that the intention is to express 'However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances, it will lead to blindly chasing appearances'; the conditional adverbial clause 〈if people pay...〉 lacks a subject for the main clause, therefore 『, it』 is added after 〈appearances〉 to make the meaning coherent and comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances will lead to run blindly after appearances.
correct_sentence: However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances, it will lead to blindly chasing of appearances.
error: run blindly after
correction: blindly chasing of
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence's logic is confused; considering the context, it is understood that the intention is to express 'However, others think if people pay more attention to appearances, it will lead to blindly chasing appearances', therefore 〈run blindly after〉 is changed to 『blindly chasing of』 to make the meaning coherent and comply with grammatical rules.