Writing prompt: Notice

Student essay:
Hello!Everybody!I want to tell you a good news: We will have an English evening! It won't only be good at our English study ,but also let you enjoy English .
We will hold at our school meeting hall .Time is 8:00 to 10:00 p.m. next Friday.That time, will be show all kinds of performance: English stories, songs, poems and short plays and so on.Mr and Mrs Green and their children form Canda will enter our English evening.And they will give a wonderful performance for us!
Welcome to teachers and students attend the English evening!We hope you have a good evening!
Student's Union
May 2,2004

Corrected essay:
Hello! Everybody! I want to tell you some good news: We will have an English evening! It won't only be good for our English study, but also let you enjoy English.
We will hold it at our school meeting hall. The time is from 8:00 to 10:00 p.m. next Friday. At that time, there will be all kinds of performances: English stories, songs, poems, short plays and so on. Mr. and Mrs. Green and their children from Canada will attend our English evening. And they will give a wonderful performance for us!
Welcome teachers and students to attend the English evening! We hope you have a good evening!
Student's Union
May 2, 2004

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Hello!Everybody!I want to tell you a good news: We will have an English evening!
correct_sentence: Hello! Everybody! I want to tell you some good news: We will have an English evening!
error: Hello!Everybody!I
correction: Hello! Everybody! I
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space should be kept after punctuation marks and between words, so 〈Hello!Everybody!I〉 is changed to 『Hello! Everybody! I』 to ensure the sentence is clear and readable.

error_sentence: Hello!Everybody!I want to tell you a good news: We will have an English evening!
correct_sentence: I want to tell you some good news: We will have an English evening!
error: a
correction: some
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: 〈news〉 is an uncountable noun and cannot be preceded by the article 〈a〉; therefore, 〈a〉 is changed to 『some』 to indicate a general reference.

error_sentence: It won't only be good at our English study ,but also let you enjoy English .

correct_sentence: It won't only be good for our English study, but also let you enjoy English.

error: at
correction: for
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The fixed phrase 『be good for』 means 'beneficial to...', while 〈be good at〉 is used to mean 'skilled at'; therefore, 〈at〉 is changed to 『for』 to correctly express the intended meaning.

error_sentence: We will hold at our school meeting hall .Time
correct_sentence: We will hold it at our school meeting hall.
correction: it
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to English grammar rules, one structure of a simple sentence is subject-verb-object; the verb 〈hold〉 requires an object to refer to the event we are going to host, so 『it』 is added after 〈hold〉 as an object to complete the sentence.

error_sentence: We will hold at our school meeting hall .Time is 8:00 to 10:00 p.m. next Friday.
correct_sentence: We will hold it at our school meeting hall. The time is from 8:00 to 10:00 p.m. next Friday.
error: .Time is
correction: . The time is from
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The noun 〈time〉 needs to be preceded by the definite article 『the』 to indicate specific reference, so 〈Time〉 is changed to 『The time』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Preposition Error: To express a time range, 'from...to...' is used; here, the preposition 『from』 should be used to connect, so 『from』 is added after 〈is〉 to correctly express the intended meaning.

error_sentence: That time, will be show all kinds of performance: English stories, songs, poems and short plays and so on.
correct_sentence: At that time, there will be all kinds of performances: English stories, songs, poems, short plays and so on.
error: That
correction: At that
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression conventions, the adverbial of time 〈that time〉 needs to be preceded by the preposition 『At』 to form the complete phrase 『At that time』, so 〈That〉 is changed to 『At that』 to indicate a specific point in time.

error_sentence: That time, will be show all kinds of performance: English stories, songs, poems and short plays and so on.
correct_sentence: At that time, there will be all kinds of performances: English stories, songs, poems, short plays and so on.
correction: there
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, the existential sentence pattern 'there be' structure should be used here, so 『there』 is added before 〈will〉 as a formal subject.

error_sentence: That time, will be show all kinds of performance: English stories, songs, poems and short plays and so on.
correct_sentence: At that time, there will be all kinds of performances: English stories, songs, poems, short plays and so on.
error: show
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈there will be〉 already implies existence and forms a double predicate with 〈show〉, so the redundant verb 〈sh ow〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: That time, will be show all kinds of performance: English stories, songs, poems and short plays and so on.
correct_sentence: At that time, there will be all kinds of performances: English stories, songs, poems, short plays and so on.
error: performance
correction: performances
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The phrase 〈all kinds of〉 needs to be followed by a plural noun, so 〈performance〉 is changed to 『performances』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: That time, will be show all kinds of performance: English stories, songs, poems and short plays and so on.
correct_sentence: At that time, there will be all kinds of performances: English stories, songs, poems, short plays and so on.
error: and
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, items in a series should be separated by commas; a comma is used to connect the two elements before the final list item 〈and so on〉, therefore 〈poems and short plays〉 is changed to 『poems, short plays』 to ensure the sentence is clear.

error_sentence: Mr and Mrs Green and their children form Canda will enter our English evening.
correct_sentence: Mr. and Mrs. Green and their children from Canada will attend our English evening.
error: Mr and Mrs
correction: Mr. and Mrs.
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Contraction Error: According to English writing conventions, title abbreviations require a period, so 〈Mr〉 and 〈Mrs〉 are changed to 『Mr.』 and 『Mrs.』, to represent 'Mister' and 'Mrs.'.

error_sentence: Mr and Mrs Green and their children form Canda will enter our English evening.
correct_sentence: Mr. and Mrs. Green and their children from Canada will attend our English evening.
error: form Canda will enter
correction: from Canada will attend
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'from Canada'; 〈form Canda〉 is a misspelling of 『from Canada』 and needs to be changed to 『from Canada』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Verb Choice Error: 〈enter〉 is not suitable for describing participation in an event, 『attend』 is more appropriate, so 〈enter〉 is changed to 『attend』 to correctly express the intended meaning.

error_sentence: And they will give a wonderful performance for us!
Welcome to teachers and students attend the English evening!We hope you have a good evening!

correct_sentence: Welcome teachers and students to attend the English evening!
error: to
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: Considering the context, the intention here is to express 'welcome teachers and students to attend the English evening'; when expressing 'welcome someone', the preposition 〈to〉 is not needed, so 〈to〉 is deleted to ensure the sentence structure is clear.

error_sentence: And they will give a wonderful performance for us!
Welcome to teachers and students attend the English evening!We hope you have a good evening!

correct_sentence: Welcome teachers and students to attend the English evening!
correction: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression conventions, the correct structure for 'welcome someone to do something' is 'welcome sb. to do', so the preposition 『to』 is added after 〈students〉 to indicate the invited parties and ensure the sentence is complete.

error_sentence: And they will give a wonderful performance for us!
Welcome to teachers and students attend the English evening!We hope you have a good evening!

correct_sentence: Welcome teachers and students to attend the English evening! We hope you have a good evening!

error: evening!We
correction: evening! We
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space should be kept after punctuation marks, so 〈evening!We〉 is changed to 『evening! We』 to ensure the sentence is clear and readable.

error_sentence: Student's Union
May 2,2004
correct_sentence: Student's Union
May 2, 2004
error: 2,2004
correction: 2, 2004
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, there should be a space between the month and the year in a date, so 〈2,2004〉 is changed to 『2, 2004』 to ensure correct formatting.