Writing prompt: Merry Christmas

Student essay:
Christmas day falls on twenty-fifth of December, it is a wonderful day for all boys and girls. In former years, I could get an apple and some candy on Christmas eve from my friends. But in this year, I had a different Christms day , this christms eve was on wednesday, so I had to spend time with my classmates. In that day we weak up very eary, when I get to class I found an apple on my table, I was very surprised, Next day it was christams day, we had a christmas party in the morning. After lunch we went to Happy Valley Amusement . I really had a great time with my classmates. Then we have dinner together. What a wonderful day!

Corrected essay:
Christmas Day falls on the twenty-fifth of December. It is a wonderful day for all boys and girls. In former years, I could get an apple and some candy on Christmas Eve from my friends. But this year, I had a different Christmas Day. This Christmas Eve was on Wednesday, so I had to spend time with my classmates. On that day we woke up very early. When I got to class I found an apple on my table. I was very surprised. The next day was Christmas Day. We had a Christmas party in the morning. After lunch we went to Happy Valley Amusement. I really had a great time with my classmates. Then we had dinner together. What a wonderful day!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Christmas day falls on twenty-fifth of December, it is a wonderful day for all boys and girls.
correct_sentence: Christmas Day falls on the twenty-fifth of December.
error: day
correction: Day
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈Christmas day〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Christmas', so 〈day〉 needs to be changed to 『Day』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: Christmas day falls on twenty-fifth of December, it is a wonderful day for all boys and girls.
correct_sentence: Christmas Day falls on the twenty-fifth of December.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the ordinal number 〈twenty-fifth〉 requires the definite article 『the』 before it to specify the date, so the determiner 『the』 is added to ensure semantic completeness.

error_sentence: Christmas day falls on twenty-fifth of December, it is a wonderful day for all boys and girls.
correct_sentence: Christmas Day falls on the twenty-fifth of December. It is a wonderful day for all boys and girls.
error: , it
correction: . It
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈Christmas day falls...〉 and 〈it is a wonderful day〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures and can stand as independent sentences, so a period instead of a comma is needed to separate them, i.e., changed to 『. It』 to comply with English sentence structure rules.

error_sentence: In former years, I could get an apple and some candy on Christmas eve from my friends.
correct_sentence: In former years, I could get an apple and some candy on Christmas Eve from my friends.
error: eve
correction: Eve
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈Christmas eve〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Christmas Eve', so 〈eve〉 needs to be changed to 『Eve』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: But in this year, I had a different Christms day , this christms eve was on wednesday, so I had to spend time with my classmates.
correct_sentence: But this year, I had a different Christmas Day.
error: in
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the time phrase 〈this year〉 does not require the preposition 〈in〉 before it, so the redundant preposition 〈in〉 is deleted to conform to English expression habits.

error_sentence: But in this year, I had a different Christms day , this christms eve was on wednesday, so I had to spend time with my classmates.
correct_sentence: But this year, I had a different Christmas Day. This Christmas Eve was on Wednesday, so I had to spend time with my classmates.
error: Christms day , this christms eve
correction: Christmas Day. This Christmas Eve
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'Christmas', so 〈Christms〉 is a misspelling of 『Christmas』 and needs to be changed to 『Christmas』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈Christmas day〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Christmas Day', so 〈day〉 needs to be changed to 『Day』 to conform to the convention; ③ Punctuation Error: 〈I had a different Christmas Day〉 and 〈This Christmas Eve was on…〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures and can stand as independent sentences, so a period instead of a comma is needed to connect them; ④ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈Christmas eve〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Christmas Eve', so 〈eve〉 needs to be changed to 『Eve』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: But in this year, I had a different Christms day , this christms eve was on wednesday, so I had to spend time with my classmates.
correct_sentence: This Christmas Eve was on Wednesday, so I had to spend time with my classmates.
error: wednesday
correction: Wednesday
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈wednesday〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Wednesday', so 〈wednesday〉 needs to be changed to 『Wednesday』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: In that day we weak up very eary, when I get to class I found an apple on my table, I was very surprised, Next day it was christams day, we had a christmas party in the morning.
correct_sentence: On that day we woke up very early.
error: In
correction: On
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the phrase 〈that day〉 referring to a specific day requires the preposition 『On』, not 〈In〉, so 〈In〉 is changed to 『On』.

error_sentence: In that day we weak up very eary, when I get to class I found an apple on my table, I was very surprised, Next day it was christams day, we had a christmas party in the morning.
correct_sentence: On that day we woke up very early.
error: weak
correction: woke
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'woke up', so 〈weak〉 is a misspelling of 『woke』 and needs to be changed to 『woke』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: In that day we weak up very eary, when I get to class I found an apple on my table, I was very surprised, Next day it was christams day, we had a christmas party in the morning.
correct_sentence: On that day we woke up very early. When I got to class I found an apple on my table.
error: eary, when I get
correction: early. When I got
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'early', so 〈eary〉 is a misspelling of 『early』 and needs to be changed to 『early』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Punctuation Error: 〈On that day we woke up very early〉 and 〈When I got to class I found…〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures and can stand as independent sentences, so the comma needs to be changed to a period; ③ Verb Tense Error: Judging from the context, this describes past events and should use the past tense, so 〈get〉 is changed to the past tense 『got』 to match the past narrative time frame.

error_sentence: In that day we weak up very eary, when I get to class I found an apple on my table, I was very surprised, Next day it was christams day, we had a christmas party in the morning.
correct_sentence: When I got to class I found an apple on my table.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈I was very surprised〉 and 〈Next day...〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures and can stand as independent sentences, so a period is needed to separate them to ensure clear sentence structure.

error_sentence: In that day we weak up very eary, when I get to class I found an apple on my table, I was very surprised, Next day it was christams day, we had a christmas party in the morning.
correct_sentence: I was very surprised. The next day was Christmas Day. We had a Christmas party in the morning.
error: , Next day it was christams day, we
correction: . The next day was Christmas Day. We
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈I was very surprised〉 and 〈Next day...〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures and can stand as independent sentences, so a period is needed to separate them to ensure clear sentence structure; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is intended to express 'Christmas', so 〈Christms〉 is a misspelling of 『Christmas』 and needs to be changed to 『Christmas』 to make the sentence coherent; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈Christmas day〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Christmas Day', so 〈day〉 needs to be changed to 『Day』 to conform to the convention; ④ Punctuation Error: 〈The next day was Christmas Day〉 and 〈We had a…〉 contain independent predicate structures/subject-verb structures and can stand as independent sentences, so a period instead of a comma is needed to connect them.

error_sentence: In that day we weak up very eary, when I get to class I found an apple on my table, I was very surprised, Next day it was christams day, we had a christmas party in the morning.
correct_sentence: We had a Christmas party in the morning.
error: christmas
correction: Christmas
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈christmas〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Christmas', so 〈christmas〉 needs to be changed to 『Christmas』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: Then we have dinner together.
correct_sentence: Then we had dinner together.
error: have
correction: had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: Judging from the context, this describes past events and should use the past tense, so 〈have〉 is changed to the past tense 『had』 to match the past narrative time frame.