Writing prompt: Merry Christmas

Student essay:
In Christmas Day,kids will stay with family.They will change gifts and write new year wishes.Also,they will make a family meal.They will make gingerbread house,candy,ham for Christmas Day.They will make a Christmas tree and put wish for the New Year cards on the tree.And putting the gifts under the tree.
In different country,they eat different supper for Christmas Day. In the United State,fanmily always eat roasted suckling pig,turkey,baked corn porridge and so on. In the United Kingdom,they like eating turkey,roasted suckling pig, fruit pie and etc.
After supper,they will change gifts and read thier own wish for the New Year to each other.And they will say "Merry Christmas" loudly.Maybe,they will take a famliy photo in this day.

Corrected essay:
On Christmas Day, kids will stay with their family. They will exchange gifts and write New Year wishes. Also, they will make a family meal. They will make gingerbread house, candy, and ham for Christmas Day. They will decorate a Christmas tree and put New Year wish cards on the tree, as well as put gifts under the tree.
In different countries, they eat different suppers for Christmas Day. In the United States, families always eat roasted suckling pig, turkey, baked corn porridge, and so on. In the United Kingdom, they like eating turkey, roasted suckling pig, fruit pie, etc.
After supper, they will exchange gifts and read their own wishes for the New Year to each other. And they will say "Merry Christmas" loudly. Maybe they will take a family photo on this day.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: In Christmas Day,kids will stay with family.
correct_sentence: On Christmas Day, kids will stay with their family.
error: In
correction: On
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: When indicating a specific date, 『On』 should be used, therefore 〈In〉 is changed to 『On』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In Christmas Day,kids will stay with family.
correct_sentence: On Christmas Day, kids will stay with their family.
correction: their
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The noun 〈family〉 requires a pronoun before it to indicate possession, therefore 『their』 is added before 〈family〉 to make the sentence meaning clearer.

error_sentence: They will change gifts and write new year wishes.
correct_sentence: They will exchange gifts and write New Year wishes.
error: change
correction: exchange
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: To express 'exchange gifts', 『exchange gifts』 should be used, therefore 〈change〉 is changed to 『exchange』 to correctly express the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: They will change gifts and write new year wishes.
correct_sentence: They will exchange gifts and write New Year wishes.
error: new year
correction: New Year
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized; 〈new year〉 is a proper noun meaning 'New Year', therefore 〈new year〉 needs to be changed to 『New Year』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: They will make gingerbread house,candy,ham for Christmas Day.
correct_sentence: They will make gingerbread house, candy, and ham for Christmas Day.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: A conjunction is needed between the last two elements in a parallel list, therefore 『and』 is added before 〈ham〉 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: They will make a Christmas tree and put wish for the New Year cards on the tree.
correct_sentence: They will decorate a Christmas tree and put New Year wish cards on the tree, as well as put gifts under the tree.

error: make
correction: decorate
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: To express 'decorate a Christmas tree', 『decorate』 should be used, therefore 〈make〉 is changed to 『decorate』 to correctly express the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: They will make a Christmas tree and put wish for the New Year cards on the tree.
correct_sentence: They will decorate a Christmas tree and put New Year wish cards on the tree, as well as put gifts under the tree.

error: wish for the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The correct expression here should be the compound noun 『New Year wish cards』, therefore the redundant 〈wish for the〉 is deleted to correctly express the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: They will make a Christmas tree and put wish for the New Year cards on the tree.
correct_sentence: They will decorate a Christmas tree and put New Year wish cards on the tree, as well as put gifts under the tree.

correction: wish
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: The correct expression here should be the compound noun 『New Year wish cards』, meaning 'New Year greeting cards', therefore 『wish』 is added before 〈cards〉 to modify the purpose of the cards.

error_sentence: They will make a Christmas tree and put wish for the New Year cards on the tree. And putting the gifts under the tree.

correct_sentence: They will decorate a Christmas tree and put New Year wish cards on the tree, as well as put gifts under the tree.

error: .And putting the
correction: , as well as put
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and incorrect structure; considering the context, it is understood that the intended meaning is 'they will decorate a Christmas tree, hang New Year wish cards on the tree, and also put gifts under the tree'. 〈And putting the gifts under the tree〉 should be connected to the preceding clause with a conjunction, therefore 〈And putting the〉 is changed to 『, as well as put』 to make the meaning coherent and conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In different country,they eat different supper for Christmas Day.
correct_sentence: In different countries, they eat different suppers for Christmas Day.
error: country
correction: countries
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈different〉 should be followed by a plural noun, therefore 〈country〉 is changed to 『countries』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In different country,they eat different supper for Christmas Day.
correct_sentence: In different countries, they eat different suppers for Christmas Day.
error: supper
correction: suppers
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈different〉 should be followed by a plural noun, therefore 〈supper〉 is changed to 『suppers』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In the United State,fanmily always eat roasted suckling pig,turkey,baked corn porridge and so on.
correct_sentence: In the United States, families always eat roasted suckling pig, turkey, baked corn porridge, and so on.
error: State,fanmily
correction: States, families
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: The correct country name is 『United States』, therefore 〈State〉 is changed to 『States』 to conform to writing conventions; ② Space Error: There is a missing space after the comma 『,』 and the following word, therefore a space is added after 『,』 to conform to writing conventions; ③ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is understood that 'families' is intended here, therefore 〈fanmily〉 is a misspelling of 『families』 and needs to be changed to 『families』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.

error_sentence: In the United State,fanmily always eat roasted suckling pig,turkey,baked corn porridge and so on.
correct_sentence: In the United States, families always eat roasted suckling pig, turkey, baked corn porridge, and so on.
correction: ,

error_sentence: In the United Kingdom,they like eating turkey,roasted suckling pig, fruit pie and etc.

correct_sentence: In the United Kingdom, they like eating turkey, roasted suckling pig, fruit pie, etc.

error: and
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈etc.〉 itself includes the meaning 'and so on' and cannot be used with 〈and〉, therefore 〈and〉 is changed to 『,』 to conform to English expression habits.

error_sentence: After supper,they will change gifts and read thier own wish for the New Year to each other.
correct_sentence: After supper, they will exchange gifts and read their own wishes for the New Year to each other.
error: change
correction: exchange
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: The verb 〈change〉 is not suitable for expressing gift exchange; 〈exchange〉 should be used, therefore 〈change〉 is changed to 『exchange』 to correctly express the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: After supper,they will change gifts and read thier own wish for the New Year to each other.
correct_sentence: After supper, they will exchange gifts and read their own wishes for the New Year to each other.
error: thier own wish
correction: their own wishes
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is understood that 'their' is intended here, therefore 〈thier〉 is a misspelling of 『their』 and needs to be changed to 『their』 to make the sentence meaning coherent; ② Noun Number Error: 〈wish〉 is a plural concept in this context, therefore 〈wish〉 is changed to 『wishes』 to fit the context of describing multiple wishes.

error_sentence: Maybe,they will take a famliy photo in this day.
correct_sentence: Maybe they will take a family photo on this day.
error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A comma is not needed after the adverb 〈Maybe〉, therefore 〈,〉 is deleted to standardize the sentence structure.

error_sentence: Maybe,they will take a famliy photo in this day.
correct_sentence: Maybe they will take a family photo on this day.
error: famliy photo in
correction: family photo on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is understood that 'family' is intended here, therefore 〈famliy〉 is a misspelling of 『family』 and needs to be changed to 『family』 to make the sentence meaning coherent; ② Preposition Error: To express a specific date, 『on』 is used, therefore 〈in〉 is changed to 『on』 to conform to grammatical rules.