Writing prompt: Actions Speak Louder than Words

Student essay:
There is an extremely famous saying: "Actions speak louder than words."Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the pieces afterwards, I had a profound comprehend to it.
As all humans, we hate to be promised with something that is never done with action.The government has repeatedly to the guarantee of food safety problems will be strict inspection and supervision, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety are emerged in endlessly .Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, various unhealthy food harm people's health. The public is so angry about this that they claim to the government to give a satisfactory dispose. After that,some merchants was dismissed from his post for gaining dishonest profits while more of them was sentenced to life imprisonment or death. The public indicated that the express terms were far more trusted than the oral promises.
The government should employ the actual action to ensure the food safety, rather than promise.Just as the saying goes:"Actions speak louder than words."

Corrected essay:
There is an extremely famous saying: "Actions speak louder than words." Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the events afterwards, I had a profound comprehension of it.
As all humans, we hate to be promised something that is never done with action. The government has repeatedly guaranteed that food safety problems will be strictly inspected and supervised, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety have emerged endlessly. Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, and various unhealthy foods harm people's health. The public is so angry about this that they demand the government give a satisfactory resolution. After that, some merchants were dismissed from their posts for gaining dishonest profits while more of them were sentenced to life imprisonment or death. The public indicated that the express terms were far more trusted than oral promises.
The government should employ the actual action to ensure the food safety, rather than just promise. Just as the saying goes: "Actions speak louder than words."

Error analysis:
error_sentence: "Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the pieces afterwards, I had a profound comprehend to it.

correct_sentence: There is an extremely famous saying: "Actions speak louder than words." Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the events afterwards, I had a profound comprehension of it.

error: "Previously
correction: " Previously
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space should be kept between the quotation mark 〈"〉 and the following content; therefore, a space is added between 〈"〉 and 〈Previously〉 to form the correct format 『" Previously』.

error_sentence: "Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the pieces afterwards, I had a profound comprehend to it.

correct_sentence: Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the events afterwards, I had a profound comprehension of it.

error: pieces
correction: events
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to English expression norms, 〈pieces〉 usually refers to 'fragments' or 'parts', which cannot accurately convey the meaning of 'events' in this context; therefore, it is replaced with the more appropriate 『events』 to make the meaning clear.

error_sentence: "Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the pieces afterwards, I had a profound comprehend to it.

correct_sentence: Previously, I couldn't appreciate the saying completely, but after the events afterwards, I had a profound comprehension of it.

error: comprehend to
correction: comprehension of
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈comprehend〉 is a verb, but a noun is needed here as an object; therefore, it is changed to the noun form 『comprehension』, conforming to the collocation habit of 『improve one's comprehension』; ② Preposition Error: According to the usage rules of prepositional phrases, 'comprehension of' should be used to express 'understanding of...', not 〈comprehension to〉; therefore, 〈to〉 is changed to 『of』 to correctly express the possessive relationship.

error_sentence: As all humans, we hate to be promised with something that is never done with action.
correct_sentence: As all humans, we hate to be promised something that is never done with action.
error: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the usage rules of prepositional phrases, the direct object structure of the verb 〈promise〉 is 'promise sb sth', which does not require the preposition 〈with〉; therefore, the redundant preposition is deleted to make the sentence conform to the correct grammatical structure of 『promise something that 』.

error_sentence: The government has repeatedly to the guarantee of food safety problems will be strict inspection and supervision, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety are emerged in endlessly .Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, various unhealthy food harm people's health.
correct_sentence: The government has repeatedly guaranteed that food safety problems will be strictly inspected and supervised, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety have emerged endlessly.
error: to the guarantee of
correction: guaranteed that
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to English expression norms, the original phrase 〈to the guarantee of〉 is a noun phrase, lacking a predicate verb, and does not conform to a complete syntactic structure. The noun phrase 〈to the guarantee of〉 is changed to the verb 『guaranteed』, so that the sentence 『the government guaranteed support』 has a complete subject-verb-object structure; ② Conjunction Error: The object clause needs to be introduced by 『that』 to clarify the content of the clause; therefore, 『that』 is added after 〈the government guaranteed〉 to form the standard clause structure 『guaranteed that...』.

error_sentence: The government has repeatedly to the guarantee of food safety problems will be strict inspection and supervision, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety are emerged in endlessly .Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, various unhealthy food harm people's health.
correct_sentence: The government has repeatedly guaranteed that food safety problems will be strictly inspected and supervised, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety have emerged endlessly.
error: strict inspection and supervision
correction: strictly inspected and supervised
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: 〈strict inspection and supervision〉 is a noun phrase, but in the context, 〈will be〉 should be followed by 『inspected』 and 『supervised』 to form the passive voice (will be + past participle); therefore, it is changed to 『strictly inspected and supervised』, where 『strictly』 is an adverb modifying the verbs, conforming to the grammatical rule of 『will be strictly inspected』.

error_sentence: The government has repeatedly to the guarantee of food safety problems will be strict inspection and supervision, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety are emerged in endlessly .Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, various unhealthy food harm people's health.
correct_sentence: The government has repeatedly guaranteed that food safety problems will be strictly inspected and supervised, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety have emerged endlessly. Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, and various unhealthy foods harm people's health.
error: are emerged in endlessly .Milk
correction: have emerged endlessly. Milk
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: The time adverbial 〈in recent years〉 needs to be paired with the present perfect tense, while 〈are emerged〉 both confuses the tense (should be present perfect) and misuses the passive voice; therefore, the auxiliary verb 〈are〉 is changed to 『have』 to correctly express the meaning of 'appeared in recent years'; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, there should be no space before a period, and a space should be kept after the period before continuing with the text. Therefore, the extra space is corrected to ensure the format is 『supervised. The』.

error_sentence: The government has repeatedly to the guarantee of food safety problems will be strict inspection and supervision, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety are emerged in endlessly .Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, various unhealthy food harm people's health.
correct_sentence: Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, and various unhealthy foods harm people's health.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English parallel structure rules, when listing multiple items, the conjunction 『and』 is needed between the last two items. The original sentence lacks a conjunction between 〈pork〉 and 〈various〉; therefore, 『and』 is added to form the correct list structure 『pork and various』.

error_sentence: The government has repeatedly to the guarantee of food safety problems will be strict inspection and supervision, but in recent years the illegal activities about food safety are emerged in endlessly .Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, various unhealthy food harm people's health.
correct_sentence: Milk powder, steamed bread, pork, and various unhealthy foods harm people's health.
error: food
correction: foods
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: When the adjective 〈various〉 (diverse) modifies a noun, it needs to be paired with a plural noun to indicate multiple categories. Therefore, the singular noun 〈food〉 is changed to the plural form 『foods』, forming the standard expression 『various foods』.

error_sentence: The public is so angry about this that they claim to the government to give a satisfactory dispose.
correct_sentence: The public is so angry about this that they demand the government give a satisfactory resolution.
error: claim to
correction: demand
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English expression norms, 〈claim to〉 usually means 'to assert to do something', which does not match the semantic context of 'the public strongly requests'. It is changed to the stronger verb 『demand』 (to request) to accurately express the intensity of the public's demands.

error_sentence: The public is so angry about this that they claim to the government to give a satisfactory dispose.
correct_sentence: The public is so angry about this that they demand the government give a satisfactory resolution.
error: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to preposition usage rules, the verb 〈demand〉 can directly take an object clause (demand that...) or a noun object (demand something), without needing the preposition 〈to〉. Therefore, the redundant preposition is deleted, conforming to the correct structure of 『demand he government』.

error_sentence: The public is so angry about this that they claim to the government to give a satisfactory dispose.
correct_sentence: The public is so angry about this that they demand the government give a satisfactory resolution.
error: dispose
correction: resolution
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: 〈dispose〉 is a verb, meaning 'to deal with (waste)', which does not match the meaning of 'problem solving' in the context. It is changed to the noun 『resolution』 (solution), so that the collocation 『demand resolution』 is both grammatically correct and accurately conveys the meaning.

error_sentence: After that,some merchants was dismissed from his post for gaining dishonest profits while more of them was sentenced to life imprisonment or death.
correct_sentence: After that, some merchants were dismissed from their posts for gaining dishonest profits while more of them were sentenced to life imprisonment or death.
error: was
correction: were
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the principle of subject-verb agreement, the plural subject 〈merchants〉 (businessmen) needs to be paired with the plural be-verb 『were』. The singular form 〈was〉 is changed to 『were』, forming the correct subject-verb agreement structure 『merchants were punished』.

error_sentence: After that,some merchants was dismissed from his post for gaining dishonest profits while more of them was sentenced to life imprisonment or death.
correct_sentence: After that, some merchants were dismissed from their posts for gaining dishonest profits while more of them were sentenced to life imprisonment or death.
error: his post
correction: their posts
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, the possessive pronoun corresponding to the plural subject 〈merchants〉 should be the plural form 『their』, not the singular 〈his〉. Therefore, it is changed to 『their』 to maintain agreement in number between the pronoun and its antecedent; ② Noun Number Error: When describing multiple merchants being dismissed, the noun for position should be in plural form to indicate multiple instances. Therefore, the singular 〈post〉 is changed to the plural 『posts』, forming the standard expression 『removed from their posts』.

error_sentence: After that,some merchants was dismissed from his post for gaining dishonest profits while more of them was sentenced to life imprisonment or death.
correct_sentence: After that, some merchants were dismissed from their posts for gaining dishonest profits while more of them were sentenced to life imprisonment or death.
error: was
correction: were
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈more of them〉 is plural; according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb needs to be in the plural form 『were』 to maintain subject-verb agreement. Therefore, the singular verb 〈was〉 is corrected to 『were』, forming the correct structure 『more of them were』.

error_sentence: The public indicated that the express terms were far more trusted than the oral promises.

correct_sentence: The public indicated that the express terms were far more trusted than oral promises.

error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: 〈the oral promises〉, as a generic concept referring to 'verbal promises' as a type of behavior, does not require the definite article 〈the〉 for modification. The redundant 〈the〉 is deleted, making 『oral promises』 conform to the usage rules for generic reference with uncountable nouns/plural nouns in English.

error_sentence: The government should employ the actual action to ensure the food safety, rather than promise.
correct_sentence: The government should employ the actual action to ensure the food safety, rather than just promise.
correction: just
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adverb Error: To strengthen the contrast between action and empty talk, the emphatic adverb 『just』 is added to 〈rather than promise〉, forming the complete contrastive structure 『rather than just promise』, highlighting the semantic layer of 'not just a promise'.

error_sentence: Just as the saying goes:"Actions speak louder than words."
correct_sentence: Just as the saying goes: "Actions speak louder than words."
error: goes:"Actions
correction: goes: "Actions
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space should be kept after the colon 〈goes:〉 before the subsequent content (including quotation marks). Therefore, the incorrect 〈goes:"〉 is modified to the standard format 『goes: "Actions』 to ensure the correct use of punctuation.