Writing prompt: Should High School Students Get Online Frequently?

Student essay:
Recently I've carried out a survey on whether high school students should get online and my classmates hold different opinions on it. Some of my classments think get online is good for us,because we can get information from the internet ,and we can also broaden our horizons by internet.We can also commulate with our classmates and share information by internet.As well,we canalso relax ourselves online.
But there are also many students think highschool students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for eyes,and falling in chating and computer games is bad for our study.We may wast time and energy online.

Corrected essay:
Recently I've carried out a survey on whether high school students should get online and my classmates hold different opinions on it. Some of my classmates think getting online is good for us, because we can get information from the Internet, and we can also broaden our horizons through the Internet. We can also communicate with our classmates and share information on the Internet. As well, we can also relax online.
But there are also many students who think high school students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for our eyes, and falling into chatting and computer games is bad for our study. We may waste time and energy online.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Some of my classments think get online is good for us,because we can get information from the internet ,and we can also broaden our horizons by internet.
correct_sentence: Some of my classmates think getting online is good for us, because we can get information from the Internet, and we can also broaden our horizons through the Internet.
error: classments think get
correction: classmates think getting
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express "classmates", therefore 〈classments〉 is a misspelling of 『classmates』, and 〈classments〉 needs to be changed to 『classmates』 to make the sentence meaning smooth; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when a verb acts as a subject, the gerund form is required. Therefore, in the original sentence, when the verb 〈get〉 acts as the subject in the object clause led by 〈think〉, the gerund form 『getting』 is required to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Some of my classments think get online is good for us,because we can get information from the internet ,and we can also broaden our horizons by internet.
correct_sentence: Some of my classmates think getting online is good for us, because we can get information from the Internet, and we can also broaden our horizons through the Internet.
error: internet
correction: Internet
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈internet〉 is a proper noun meaning "network", therefore 〈internet〉 needs to be changed to 『Internet』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: Some of my classments think get online is good for us,because we can get information from the internet ,and we can also broaden our horizons by internet.
correct_sentence: Some of my classmates think getting online is good for us, because we can get information from the Internet, and we can also broaden our horizons through the Internet.
error: by internet
correction: through the Internet
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, when indicating 'through a certain medium', 『through』 should be used instead of 〈by〉. Therefore, 〈by〉 needs to be changed to 『through』 to conform to the meaning; ② Determiner Error: According to the context, this specifically refers to "the internet", requiring the addition of the definite article 『the』 for specification. Therefore, 〈internet〉 is changed to 『the Internet』 to conform to the meaning; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈internet〉 is a proper noun meaning "network", therefore 〈internet〉 needs to be changed to 『Internet』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: We can also commulate with our classmates and share information by internet.
correct_sentence: We can also communicate with our classmates and share information on the Internet.
error: commulate
correction: communicate
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express "communicate". Therefore, 〈commulate〉 is a misspelling of 『communicate』, and 〈commulate〉 needs to be changed to 『communicate』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: We can also commulate with our classmates and share information by internet.
correct_sentence: We can also communicate with our classmates and share information on the Internet.
error: by internet
correction: on the Internet
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, to indicate being on an internet platform, 『on』 should be used, and 『through』 should be used instead of 〈by〉. Therefore, 〈by〉 needs to be changed to 『on』 to conform to the meaning; ② Determiner Error: According to the context, this specifically refers to "the internet", requiring the addition of the definite article 『the』 for specification. Therefore, 〈internet〉 is changed to 『the Internet』 to conform to the meaning; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized. 〈internet〉 is a proper noun meaning "network", therefore 〈internet〉 needs to be changed to 『Internet』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: As well,we canalso relax ourselves online.

correct_sentence: As well, we can also relax online.

error: canalso relax ourselves
correction: can also relax
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, spaces are needed between words. The original sentence 〈canalso〉 lacks necessary spaces, therefore the conjoined 〈canalso〉 is changed to 『can also』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Word Redundancy Error: According to the context, the meaning here is "we can relax online". Therefore, the reflexive pronoun 〈ourselves〉 is redundant in this context, and deleting it makes it more concise.

error_sentence: But there are also many students think highschool students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for eyes,and falling in chating and computer games is bad for our study.
correct_sentence: But there are also many students who think high school students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for our eyes, and falling into chatting and computer games is bad for our study.
error: think highschool
correction: who think high school
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Relative Word Error: According to the context, the original sentence's adjective clause lacks a relative pronoun. Therefore, 『who』 needs to be added to connect the main and subordinate clauses to conform to the meaning; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, spaces are needed between words. The original sentence 〈highschool〉 lacks necessary spaces, therefore the conjoined 〈highschool〉 is changed to 『high school』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: But there are also many students think highschool students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for eyes,and falling in chating and computer games is bad for our study.
correct_sentence: But there are also many students who think high school students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for our eyes, and falling into chatting and computer games is bad for our study.
correction: our
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence's 〈eyes〉 lacks a necessary determiner to indicate a specific object. Therefore, 『our』 needs to be added before 〈eyes〉 to clarify the possessive relationship.

error_sentence: But there are also many students think highschool students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for eyes,and falling in chating and computer games is bad for our study.
correct_sentence: But there are also many students who think high school students should not get online frequently because watching the computer for a long time is bad for our eyes, and falling into chatting and computer games is bad for our study.
error: in chating
correction: into chatting
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to the context, to express falling into a certain state, 『into』 should be used instead of 〈in〉. Therefore, 〈in〉 needs to be changed to 『into』 to conform to the meaning; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express "chatting". Therefore, 〈chating〉 is a misspelling of 『chatting』, and 〈chating〉 needs to be changed to 『chatting』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: We may wast time and energy online.
correct_sentence: We may waste time and energy online.
error: wast
correction: waste
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express "waste". Therefore, 〈wast〉 is a misspelling of 『waste』, and 〈wast〉 needs to be changed to 『waste』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.