Writing prompt: Shi Maguang

Student essay:
Shi Maguang is a famous people in Chinese history, there is a story about his childhood.
When he was seven, he played the hide-and-seek with his friends in the garden. Suddenly a boy fell into a water-filled tank, so children was scared to cry, some of other went for help.
At that time, only Shi Maguang very dispassionate, he asked the children to crash a big stone to the tank. By the crash from stone, the tank broken and the boy who fell into tank pour out. Adult was surprised to Shi Maguang and commended his wisedom.
I was so surprised that Shi Maguang's wisedem and dispassionate. Shi Maguang was a wise man,was't,he?

Corrected essay:
Si Maguang is a famous person in Chinese history. There is a story about his childhood.
When he was seven, he played hide-and-seek with his friends in the garden. Suddenly a boy fell into a water-filled tank, so the children were scared and started to cry. Some of the others went for help.
At that time, only Si Maguang was very dispassionate. He asked the children to crash a big stone into the tank. By the crash from the stone, the tank broke and the boy who fell into the tank poured out. The adults were surprised by Si Maguang and commended his wisdom.
I was so surprised by Si Maguang's wisdom and dispassion. Si Maguang was a wise man, wasn't he?

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Shi Maguang is a famous people in Chinese history, there is a story about his childhood.

correct_sentence: Si Maguang is a famous person in Chinese history.
error: Shi
correction: Si
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression here is 'Si Maguang', therefore 〈Shi〉 is a misspelling of 『Si』; it needs to be changed to 『Si』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Shi Maguang is a famous people in Chinese history, there is a story about his childhood.

correct_sentence: Si Maguang is a famous person in Chinese history.
error: people
correction: person
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈people〉 is plural, but here it describes the person 'Si Maguang', requiring the singular form, so 〈people〉 is changed to 『person』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Shi Maguang is a famous people in Chinese history, there is a story about his childhood.

correct_sentence: Si Maguang is a famous person in Chinese history. There is a story about his childhood.

error: , there
correction: . There
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈Shi Maguang is a famous people in Chinese history〉 and 〈there is a story about his childhood〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be separate sentences, therefore 〈, there〉 is changed to 『. There』.

error_sentence: When he was seven, he played the hide-and-seek with his friends in the garden.
correct_sentence: When he was seven, he played hide-and-seek with his friends in the garden.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The game name 〈hide-and-seek〉 usually does not require an article, so 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: Suddenly a boy fell into a water-filled tank, so children was scared to cry, some of other went for help.

correct_sentence: Suddenly a boy fell into a water-filled tank, so the children were scared and started to cry.
error: children was scared
correction: the children were scared and started
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: A definite article should be used here to specify that group of children, so 『the』 is added before 〈children〉 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈children〉 is plural, and the verb should be plural, so 〈was〉 is changed to 『were』 to conform to subject-verb agreement rules; ③ Other Error: Considering the context, the intended expression here is “so the children were scared and started to cry”, therefore 『and started』 is added after 〈scared〉 to maintain semantic coherence.

error_sentence: Suddenly a boy fell into a water-filled tank, so children was scared to cry, some of other went for help.

correct_sentence: Suddenly a boy fell into a water-filled tank, so the children were scared and started to cry. Some of the others went for help.

error: , some of other
correction: . Some of the others
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: 〈Suddenly a boy fell into a water-filled tank, so children was scared to cry〉 and 〈some of other went for help〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be separate sentences, therefore 〈, some〉 is changed to 『. Some』; ② Determiner Error: The correct expression is 『Some of the others』, used to refer to other parts of a group (in this case, other people), therefore 〈other〉 is changed to 『the others』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: At that time, only Shi Maguang very dispassionate, he asked the children to crash a big stone to the tank.
correct_sentence: At that time, only Si Maguang was very dispassionate.
error: Shi Maguang
correction: Si Maguang was
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression here is 'Si Maguang', therefore 〈Shi〉 is a misspelling of 『Si』; it needs to be changed to 『Si』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Sentence Structure Error: The sentence lacks a predicate verb; the linking verb 『was』 needs to be added to form a complete subject-linking verb-predicative structure, therefore 『was』 is added after 〈Maguang〉 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: At that time, only Shi Maguang very dispassionate, he asked the children to crash a big stone to the tank.
correct_sentence: At that time, only Si Maguang was very dispassionate. He asked the children to crash a big stone into the tank.
error: , he
correction: . He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈At that time, only Shi Maguang very dispassionate〉 and 〈he asked the children to crash a big stone to the tank〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be separate sentences, therefore 〈, he〉 is changed to 『. He』.

error_sentence: At that time, only Shi Maguang very dispassionate, he asked the children to crash a big stone to the tank.
correct_sentence: He asked the children to crash a big stone into the tank.
error: to
correction: into
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The preposition 〈to〉 cannot express the meaning of “crashing into a container”; the directional preposition 『into』 should be used, therefore 〈to〉 is changed to 『into』 to correctly express the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: By the crash from stone, the tank broken and the boy who fell into tank pour out.
correct_sentence: By the crash from the stone, the tank broke and the boy who fell into the tank poured out.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The definite article 『the』 needs to be added here to refer to the stone mentioned earlier, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈stone〉 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: By the crash from stone, the tank broken and the boy who fell into tank pour out.
correct_sentence: By the crash from the stone, the tank broke and the boy who fell into the tank poured out.
error: broken
correction: broke
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This part describes a past event, so the verb needs to be in the past tense, therefore 〈broken〉 is changed to 『broke』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: By the crash from stone, the tank broken and the boy who fell into tank pour out.
correct_sentence: By the crash from the stone, the tank broke and the boy who fell into the tank poured out.
error: tank pour
correction: the tank poured
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The definite article 『the』 needs to be added here to refer to the tank mentioned earlier, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈tank〉 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Verb Tense Error: This part describes a past event, so the verb needs to be in the past tense, therefore 〈pour〉 is changed to 『poured』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: Adult was surprised to Shi Maguang and commended his wisedom.

correct_sentence: The adults were surprised by Si Maguang and commended his wisdom.

error: Adult was surprised to Shi
correction: The adults were surprised by Si
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: 〈Adult〉 here represents a plural concept, therefore 〈Adult 〉 is changed to 『The adults』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: 『The adults』 is a plural subject and needs to be paired with 『were』, therefore 〈was〉 is changed to 『were』 to conform to grammatical rules; ③ Preposition Error: This is a passive voice, and the agent or doer of the action is usually introduced by 『by』, therefore 〈to〉 is changed to 『by』 to conform to grammatical rules; ④ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression here is 'Si Maguang', therefore 〈Shi〉 is a misspelling of 『Si』; it needs to be changed to 『Si』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Adult was surprised to Shi Maguang and commended his wisedom.

correct_sentence: The adults were surprised by Si Maguang and commended his wisdom.

error: wisedom
correction: wisdom
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression here is 'wisdom', therefore 〈wisedom〉 is a misspelling of 『wisdom』; it needs to be changed to 『wisdom』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: I was so surprised that Shi Maguang's wisedem and dispassionate.
correct_sentence: I was so surprised by Si Maguang's wisdom and dispassion.
error: that Shi
correction: by Si
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: This is a passive voice, and the agent or doer of the action is usually introduced by 『by』, therefore 〈that〉 is changed to 『by』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression here is 'Si Maguang', therefore 〈Shi〉 is a misspelling of 『Si』; it needs to be changed to 『Si』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: I was so surprised that Shi Maguang's wisedem and dispassionate. Shi Maguang was a wise man,was't,he?
correct_sentence: I was so surprised by Si Maguang's wisdom and dispassion. Si Maguang was a wise man, wasn't he?
error: wisedem and dispassionate. Shi
correction: wisdom and dispassion. Si
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression here is 'wisdom', therefore 〈wisedem〉 is a misspelling of 『wisdom』; it needs to be changed to 『wisdom』 to make the sentence coherent; ② PoS Confusion Error: 〈dispassionate〉 is an adjective; the noun form is needed here, therefore 〈dispassionate〉 is changed to 『dispassion』 to conform to grammatical rules; ③ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intended expression here is 'Si Maguang', therefore 〈Shi〉 is a misspelling of 『Si』; it needs to be changed to 『Si』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Shi Maguang was a wise man,was't,he?
correct_sentence: Si Maguang was a wise man, wasn't he?
error: was't,
correction: wasn't
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Contraction Error: 〈was't〉 is an incorrect contraction form, therefore 〈was't〉 is changed to 『wasn't』 to conform to writing conventions.