Writing prompt: Traditional Reading or Online Reading?

Student essay:
I think that traditional reading and online reading are all important.They are different ways of reading.They both have advantages and disadvantages.
Online reading is more interesting than traditional reading.It have lots of the latest articles and reports.Everybody can read them at home.It's very easy.
Traditional reading is more real and safer.Because everyone can write their idea on the Internet,there are some wrong and false information.We must look at the computer for a long time.It will make our eyes bad.Traditional reading is not like this.The books that have come out are writing by well-known people or teams.We can read it more safely.We shouldn't only read on the Internet.Because traditional reading and online reading are all very useful to us.

Corrected essay:
I think that traditional reading and online reading are both important. They are different ways of reading. They both have advantages and disadvantages.
Online reading is more interesting than traditional reading. It has lots of the latest articles and reports. Everybody can read them at home. It's very easy.
Traditional reading is more real and safer. Because everyone can write their idea on the Internet, there is some wrong and false information. We must look at the computer for a long time. It will make our eyes bad. Traditional reading is not like this. The books that have come out are written by well-known people or teams. We can read them more safely. We shouldn't only read on the Internet because traditional reading and online reading are both very useful to us.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I think that traditional reading and online reading are all important.
correct_sentence: I think that traditional reading and online reading are both important.
error: all
correction: both
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: When referring to two things, the determiner 『both』 should be used; the original phrase 〈traditional reading and online reading〉 refers to two objects, therefore 〈all〉 is changed to 『both』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: It have lots of the latest articles and reports.
correct_sentence: It has lots of the latest articles and reports.
error: have
correction: has
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈It〉 is third-person singular and requires the third-person singular form of the verb; therefore, 〈have〉 is changed to 『has』 to comply with subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: Because everyone can write their idea on the Internet,there are some wrong and false information.
correct_sentence: Because everyone can write their idea on the Internet, there is some wrong and false information.
error: are
correction: is
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: 〈information〉 is an uncountable noun, so the verb must be in the singular form; therefore, 〈are〉 is changed to 『is』 to comply with subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: The books that have come out are writing by well-known people or teams.
correct_sentence: The books that have come out are written by well-known people or teams.
error: writing
correction: written
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Voice Error: This is a passive voice context; the passive voice structure requires the past participle form, therefore 〈writing〉 is changed to 『written』 to form a passive structure, conforming to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: We can read it more safely.
correct_sentence: We can read them more safely.
error: it
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The preceding noun 〈books〉 is plural, therefore the singular pronoun 〈it〉 is changed to the plural 『them』 to maintain number agreement.

error_sentence: We shouldn't only read on the Internet. Because traditional reading and online reading are all very useful to us.
correct_sentence: We shouldn't only read on the Internet because traditional reading and online reading are both very useful to us.
error: .Because
correction: because
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: A subordinate clause introduced by the conjunction 〈Because〉 cannot stand alone as a sentence, so 〈.〉 is deleted to maintain sentence fluency and structural integrity; ② Case Error: After deleting 〈.〉, 〈Because〉 is in the middle of the sentence, and its first letter does not need to be capitalized, therefore 〈Because〉 is changed to 『because』.

error_sentence: Because traditional reading and online reading are all very useful to us.
correct_sentence: We shouldn't only read on the Internet because traditional reading and online reading are both very useful to us.
error: all
correction: both
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: When referring to two things, the determiner 『both』 should be used; the original phrase 〈traditional reading and online reading〉 refers to two objects, therefore 〈all〉 is changed to 『both』 to conform to grammatical rules.