Writing prompt: Whether the Listening Test Should Be Canceled

Student essay:
Recently, my classmates had a discussion on whether the listening test should be canceled in the college entrance examination. As we know, different people have different ideas. I would like to show you what their opinions are.
Some students are for the opinion that it should not be canceled, saying that listening, as one of the four basic language skills, is such an important one that can't be ignored. In addition, listening is an important way to receive information. What's more, with the international cooperation's increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen English.
The other students, however, hold the opposite idea. The main reason why they think so is that the listening effect makes a difference in different place, leading to the unfair exam result. Also, there is a great gap in English teachers and listening equipments between cities and country. Furthermore, not every student would have the chance to speak to foreigners in the future.
So far, the discussion hasn't come to an agreement yet.

Corrected essay:
Recently, my classmates had a discussion on whether the listening test should be canceled in the college entrance examination. As we know, different people have different ideas. I would like to show you what their opinions are.
Some students are of the opinion that it should not be canceled, saying that listening, as one of the four basic language skills, is such an important one that it can't be ignored. In addition, listening is an important way to receive information. What's more, with international cooperation increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen to English.
The other students, however, hold the opposite idea. The main reason why they think so is that the environment and equipment for listening tests vary in different places, leading to unfair exam results. Also, there is a great gap in English teachers and listening equipment between cities and the countryside. Furthermore, not every student will have the chance to speak to foreigners in the future.
So far, the discussion hasn't come to an agreement yet.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Some students are for the opinion that it should not be canceled, saying that listening, as one of the four basic language skills, is such an important one that can't be ignored.
correct_sentence: Some students are of the opinion that it should not be canceled, saying that listening, as one of the four basic language skills, is such an important one that it can't be ignored.
error: for
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The correct fixed phrase is “be of the opinion”, meaning “to hold a certain view”, therefore 〈for〉 is changed to 『of』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: Some students are for the opinion that it should not be canceled, saying that listening, as one of the four basic language skills, is such an important one that can't be ignored.
correct_sentence: Some students are of the opinion that it should not be canceled, saying that listening, as one of the four basic language skills, is such an important one that it can't be ignored.
correction: it
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The resultative adverbial clause introduced by 〈that〉 lacks a subject, therefore 『it』 is added after 〈that〉 to make the clause structure complete.

error_sentence: What's more, with the international cooperation's increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen English.

correct_sentence: What's more, with international cooperation increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen to English.

error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: Here 〈international cooperation increasing〉 is a gerund phrase acting as an accompanying adverbial, which does not require an article for modification, therefore 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: What's more, with the international cooperation's increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen English.

correct_sentence: What's more, with international cooperation increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen to English.

error: 's
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Possessive Error: The possessive noun 〈cooperation's〉 is not grammatically logical here, therefore 〈's〉 is deleted to conform to semantics and structure.

error_sentence: What's more, with the international cooperation's increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen English.

correct_sentence: What's more, with international cooperation increasing, it is practical and necessary for us to improve our ability to speak and listen to English.

correction: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The verb 〈listen〉 needs to be followed by the preposition 〈to〉 to connect to an object, therefore 『to』 is added after 〈listen〉 to form the correct collocation 『listen to English』.

error_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the listening effect makes a difference in different place, leading to the unfair exam result.
correct_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the environment and equipment for listening tests vary in different places, leading to unfair exam results.
error: listening effect makes a difference
correction: environment and equipment for listening tests vary
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically chaotic and semantically unclear; considering the context, it is understood that the intended meaning is “the main reason they think so is that the environment and equipment for listening tests vary in different places”, therefore 〈listening effect makes a difference〉 is changed to 『environment and equipment for listening tests vary』 to make the semantics coherent and conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the listening effect makes a difference in different place, leading to the unfair exam result.
correct_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the environment and equipment for listening tests vary in different places, leading to unfair exam results.
error: place
correction: places
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈different〉 is followed by the plural form of a countable noun, therefore 〈place〉 is changed to 『places』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the listening effect makes a difference in different place, leading to the unfair exam result.
correct_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the environment and equipment for listening tests vary in different places, leading to unfair exam results.
error: the
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈unfair exam results〉 is a generic concept and does not require a definite article for modification, therefore 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the listening effect makes a difference in different place, leading to the unfair exam result.
correct_sentence: The main reason why they think so is that the environment and equipment for listening tests vary in different places, leading to unfair exam results.
error: result
correction: results
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: Exam results usually involve multiple aspects and should be in plural form, therefore 〈result〉 is changed to 『results』 to correctly express the meaning.

error_sentence: Also, there is a great gap in English teachers and listening equipments between cities and country.
correct_sentence: Also, there is a great gap in English teachers and listening equipment between cities and the countryside.
error: equipments
correction: equipment
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 『equipment』 is an uncountable noun and has no plural form, therefore 〈equipments〉 is changed to 『equipment』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Also, there is a great gap in English teachers and listening equipments between cities and country.
correct_sentence: Also, there is a great gap in English teachers and listening equipment between cities and the countryside.
error: country
correction: the countryside
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Determiner Error: 『countryside』 as a specific, general concept, refers to the entire rural area, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈country〉 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Noun Error: 〈country〉 means “nation”, whereas here the concept of “rural area” needs to be expressed, therefore 〈country〉 is changed to 『countryside』 to correctly express the meaning.

error_sentence: Furthermore, not every student would have the chance to speak to foreigners in the future.

correct_sentence: Furthermore, not every student will have the chance to speak to foreigners in the future.

error: would
correction: will
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a future certainty and requires the simple future tense, therefore 〈would〉 is changed to 『will』 to conform to grammatical rules.