Writing prompt: Exchange Student

Student essay:
Dear Chirs,
I'm L,monitor of Class One,Grade Eleven.I feel appreciate it that you will study in my class.
This is the first time that you have came to china,so keep an eye on the temperature and have a healthy diet is necessay.As a consequence of the different culture between China and America,the life there may trouble you in some aspects.If you want to ask somebody for help about the problem,the student in our class can give you a valuable heip.They are warmhearted and ready to give a helping hand to you.Time permitting,we expect to hold a cultural communication,in order to improve our language level,acquire knowledge broaden our horrizons from different culture.Above all ,we can promoting the traditional friendship between us during this meeting.
Wish you a happy stay in China.
Yars sincerely
L

Corrected essay:
Dear Chris,
I'm L, monitor of Class One, Grade Eleven. I feel appreciative that you will study in my class.
This is the first time that you have come to China, so keeping an eye on the temperature and having a healthy diet is necessary. As a consequence of the cultural differences between China and America, life here may trouble you in some aspects. If you want to ask somebody for help with the problem, the students in our class can give you valuable help. They are warmhearted and ready to give a helping hand to you. Time permitting, we expect to hold a cultural communication in order to improve our language level, acquire knowledge and broaden our horizons from different cultures. Above all, we can promote the traditional friendship between us during this meeting.
Wish you a happy stay in China.
Yours sincerely,
L

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Dear Chirs,
I'm L,monitor of Class One,Grade Eleven.
correct_sentence: Dear Chris,
I'm L, monitor of Class One, Grade Eleven.
error: Chirs
correction: Chris
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that a person's name is intended here, so 〈Chirs〉 is a misspelling of 『Chris』; 〈Chirs〉 needs to be changed to 『Chris』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: I feel appreciate it that you will study in my class.

correct_sentence: I feel appreciative that you will study in my class.

error: appreciate it
correction: appreciative
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: 〈feel〉 is a linking verb and should be followed by an adjective as a predicative, so 〈appreciate〉 is changed to 『appreciative』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Word Redundancy Error: 〈it〉 is unnecessary in the sentence, causing structural confusion, so 〈it〉 is deleted to standardize the sentence structure.

error_sentence: This is the first time that you have came to china,so keep an eye on the temperature and have a healthy diet is necessay.
correct_sentence: This is the first time that you have come to China, so keeping an eye on the temperature and having a healthy diet is necessary.
error: came to china
correction: come to China
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: The present perfect tense is used here, so 〈came〉 is changed to 『come』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized; here, 〈china〉 is a proper noun meaning “China”, so 〈china〉 needs to be changed to 『China』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: This is the first time that you have came to china,so keep an eye on the temperature and have a healthy diet is necessay.
correct_sentence: This is the first time that you have come to China, so keeping an eye on the temperature and having a healthy diet is necessary.
error: keep
correction: keeping
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the subject of a sentence is an action or behavior, the subject needs to be in the gerund form, so 〈keep〉 is changed to the gerund 『keeping』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: This is the first time that you have came to china,so keep an eye on the temperature and have a healthy diet is necessay.
correct_sentence: This is the first time that you have come to China, so keeping an eye on the temperature and having a healthy diet is necessary.
error: have
correction: having
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the subject of a sentence is an action or behavior, the subject needs to be in the gerund form, so 〈have〉 is changed to the gerund 『having』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: This is the first time that you have came to china,so keep an eye on the temperature and have a healthy diet is necessay.
correct_sentence: This is the first time that you have come to China, so keeping an eye on the temperature and having a healthy diet is necessary.
error: necessay
correction: necessary
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that “necessary” is intended here, so 〈necessay〉 is a misspelling of 『necessary』; 〈necessay〉 needs to be changed to 『necessary』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: As a consequence of the different culture between China and America,the life there may trouble you in some aspects.
correct_sentence: As a consequence of the cultural differences between China and America, life here may trouble you in some aspects.
error: different culture
correction: cultural differences
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Other Error: 〈different culture〉 does not conform to common English usage; 『cultural differences』 should be used to express cultural differences, so 〈different culture〉 is changed to 『cultural differences』 to correctly express the meaning of the sentence.

error_sentence: As a consequence of the different culture between China and America,the life there may trouble you in some aspects.
correct_sentence: As a consequence of the cultural differences between China and America, life here may trouble you in some aspects.
error: the life there
correction: life here
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: We usually do not add a definite article when referring to abstract concepts like "life", so 〈the〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules; ② Pronoun Error: Considering the context, it is clear that the speaker's current location is China, so 『here』 should be used; therefore, 〈there〉 is changed to 『here』 to correctly express the meaning of the sentence.

error_sentence: If you want to ask somebody for help about the problem,the student in our class can give you a valuable heip.
correct_sentence: If you want to ask somebody for help with the problem, the students in our class can give you valuable help.
error: about
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The fixed phrase “ask...for help” should be followed by the preposition 『with』 to express helping to solve a problem, so 〈about〉 is changed to 『with』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: If you want to ask somebody for help about the problem,the student in our class can give you a valuable heip.
correct_sentence: If you want to ask somebody for help with the problem, the students in our class can give you valuable help.
error: student
correction: students
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: In the context, it refers to all students in the class, so the plural form 『students』 should be used; therefore, 〈student〉 is changed to 『students』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: If you want to ask somebody for help about the problem,the student in our class can give you a valuable heip.
correct_sentence: If you want to ask somebody for help with the problem, the students in our class can give you valuable help.
error: a valuable heip
correction: valuable help
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: 〈help〉 is an uncountable noun and does not need to be modified by the article 〈a〉, so 〈a〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that “help” is intended here, so 〈heip〉 is a misspelling of 『help』; 〈heip〉 needs to be changed to 『help』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Time permitting,we expect to hold a cultural communication,in order to improve our language level,acquire knowledge broaden our horrizons from different culture.
correct_sentence: Time permitting, we expect to hold a cultural communication in order to improve our language level, acquire knowledge and broaden our horizons from different cultures.
error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: 〈in order to improve〉 is an adverbial of purpose that directly modifies the action of the main clause and does not need to be separated from the main clause by a comma, so the 〈,〉 after 〈communication〉 is deleted.

error_sentence: Time permitting,we expect to hold a cultural communication,in order to improve our language level,acquire knowledge broaden our horrizons from different culture.
correct_sentence: Time permitting, we expect to hold a cultural communication in order to improve our language level, acquire knowledge and broaden our horizons from different cultures.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The coordinate verb phrases 〈acquire knowledge〉 and 〈broaden〉 lack a conjunction to connect these two actions, so 『and』 is added after 〈knowledge〉 to maintain coherence.

error_sentence: Time permitting,we expect to hold a cultural communication,in order to improve our language level,acquire knowledge broaden our horrizons from different culture.
correct_sentence: Time permitting, we expect to hold a cultural communication in order to improve our language level, acquire knowledge and broaden our horizons from different cultures.
error: horrizons
correction: horizons
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that “horizons” is intended here, so 〈horrizons〉 is a misspelling of 『horizons』; 〈horrizons〉 needs to be changed to 『horizons』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Time permitting,we expect to hold a cultural communication,in order to improve our language level,acquire knowledge broaden our horrizons from different culture.
correct_sentence: Time permitting, we expect to hold a cultural communication in order to improve our language level, acquire knowledge and broaden our horizons from different cultures.
error: culture
correction: cultures
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the meaning “different cultures”, it is clear that the plural form should be used here, so 〈culture〉 is changed to 『cultures』 to correctly express the meaning of the sentence.

error_sentence: Above all ,we can promoting the traditional friendship between us during this meeting.

correct_sentence: Above all, we can promote the traditional friendship between us during this meeting.

error: promoting
correction: promote
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Other Error: The modal verb 〈can〉 must be followed by the base form of the verb, so the gerund 〈promoting〉 is changed to 『promote』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Yars sincerely
L
correct_sentence: Yours sincerely,
L
error: Yars sincerely
correction: Yours sincerely,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that “Yours” is intended here, so 〈Yars 〉 is a misspelling of 『Yours』; 〈Yars〉 needs to be changed to 『Yours』 to make the sentence coherent; ② Punctuation Error: A comma needs to be added after the complimentary close at the end of a letter, so 『,』 is added after 〈sincerely〉 to conform to writing conventions.