Writing prompt: Exam Stress Relief Week

Student essay:
Hello, I am Li Jin.
The following is a specific report on decompression week activities:
1 students in the music to relax and listen to the music room, relax, relax.
2 students playing football on the playground.
3 tudents are discussing the issue in the playground.
4 students have a class meeting in the classroom.
Above, is the specific content of decompression week activities.
Thank you

Corrected essay:
Hello, I am Li Jin.
The following is a specific report on decompression week activities.
1. Students in the music room listen to music to relax.
2. Students play football on the playground.
3. Students discuss the issue on the playground.
4. Students have a class meeting in the classroom.
Above is the specific content of decompression week activities.
Thank you.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The following is a specific report on decompression week activities:
1 students in the music to relax and listen to the music room, relax, relax.

correct_sentence: The following is a specific report on decompression week activities.

error: :
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to formal writing norms, the introductory sentence 〈The following...〉, as an independent declarative sentence, should end with a period, not a colon. Change 〈activities:〉 to 『activities.』 to comply with academic/formal report punctuation standards.

error_sentence: The following is a specific report on decompression week activities:
1 students in the music to relax and listen to the music room, relax, relax.

correct_sentence: 1. Students in the music room listen to music to relax.

error: students
correction: . Students
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English list format norms, a period must follow the number of a numbered list item; therefore, add the missing punctuation before 〈1 students〉, correcting it to 『1.』 to clarify the list hierarchy. ② Case Error: Following English list item writing rules, the first letter of the first word after the number must be capitalized; change 〈1 students〉 to 『1. Students』 to ensure format consistency.

error_sentence: The following is a specific report on decompression week activities:
1 students in the music to relax and listen to the music room, relax, relax.

correct_sentence: Students in the music room listen to music to relax.

error: to relax and
correction: room
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to prepositional phrase completeness requirements, 〈in the music〉 needs a core noun to form a complete adverbial phrase of place; add 『room』 to form 『in the music room』, accurately expressing the meaning "in the music classroom". ② Word Redundancy: The original phrase 〈to relax〉 is semantically redundant with the following text; according to the principle of conciseness, delete the redundant component 〈to relax and〉, optimizing to 『Students in the music room listen to music』, making the expression more aligned with idiomatic English logic.

error_sentence: The following is a specific report on decompression week activities:
1 students in the music to relax and listen to the music room, relax, relax.

correct_sentence: Students in the music room listen to music to relax.

error: the music room, relax,
correction: music to
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English idiomatic usage, when generally referring to the activity of "listening to music," the article should be omitted; therefore, change 〈listen to the music〉 to 『listen to music』 (no article) to conform to the "engage in + no-article activity noun" structure. ② Word Redundancy: The original phrase 〈listen to the music room〉 has a semantic contradiction, as 〈room〉 cannot be 〈listen to〉; simplify directly to 『listen to music』; delete the repeated 〈relax〉, optimizing the redundant expression 〈the music room, relax, relax〉 to 『music to relax』, using an infinitive to express purpose, which is both concise and aligns with the "means + purpose" logical structure. ③ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the norms for adverbials of purpose, change the incorrectly connected 〈listen to the music room, relax〉 to 『listen to music to relax』, using the infinitive "to + base form of verb" to clarify the purpose of the action, conforming to the standard "verb + to-infinitive" grammatical structure.

error_sentence: 2 students playing football on the playground.

correct_sentence: 2. Students play football on the playground.

error: students playing
correction: . Students play
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English list format norms, a period must follow the number of a numbered list item; therefore, add the missing punctuation before 〈2 students〉, correcting it to 『2.』 to clarify the list hierarchy. ② Case Error: Following English list item writing rules, the first letter of the first word after the number must be capitalized; change 〈2 students〉 to 『2. Students』 to ensure format consistency. ③ Verb Tense Error: According to the principle of contextual tense consistency, the entire text uses the simple present tense to describe regular activities; therefore, change the present participle 〈playing〉 to the base form of the verb 『play』, forming the standard present tense structure 『students play basketball』.

error_sentence: 3 tudents are discussing the issue in the playground.

correct_sentence: 3. Students discuss the issue on the playground.

error: tudents are discussing
correction: . Students discuss
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English list format norms, a period must follow the number of a numbered list item; therefore, add the missing punctuation before 〈3 students〉, correcting it to 『3.』 to clarify the list hierarchy. ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the original sentence, it is clear that "students" is intended here; thus, 〈tudents〉 in the original sentence is a spelling error and needs to be changed to "students" and capitalized, finally becoming 『Students』. ③ Verb Tense Error: According to the principle of contextual tense consistency, the entire text uses the simple present tense to describe regular activities; therefore, change the present participle 〈are discussing〉 to the base form of the verb 『discuss』, forming the standard present tense structure 『 Students discuss the issue』.

error_sentence: 3 tudents are discussing the issue in the playground.

correct_sentence: Students discuss the issue on the playground.

error: in
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to fixed English prepositional collocations for locations, 〈playground〉, as an open flat area, should be paired with the preposition 『on』 rather than 〈in〉; therefore, it is corrected to 『on the playground』.

error_sentence: 4 students have a class meeting in the classroom.

correct_sentence: 4. Students have a class meeting in the classroom.

error: students
correction: . Students
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English list format norms, a period must follow the number of a numbered list item; therefore, add the missing punctuation before 〈4 students〉, correcting it to 『4.』 to clarify the list hierarchy. ② Case Error: Following English list item writing rules, the first letter of the first word after the number must be capitalized; change 〈4 students〉 to 『4. Students』 to ensure format consistency.

error_sentence: Above, is the specific content of decompression week activities.

correct_sentence: Above is the specific content of decompression week activities.

error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, no comma is needed between the subject 〈Above〉 and the linking verb 〈is〉; delete the comma to form the coherent structure 『Above is...』, avoiding disruption of the direct subject-verb relationship.

error_sentence: Thank you
correct_sentence: Thank you.
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to formal text formatting requirements, the closing phrase 〈Thank you〉, as an independent sentence, needs to end with a period; add the missing punctuation to make it 『Thank you.』, conforming to the closure norms of written communication.