Writing prompt: Being a Good Listener

Student essay:
Good evening my dear schoolmates and teachers. My name is A even from the graduating class. I'm extremely honoured to stand here to make a speech. Living in this modern society, no matter if we want to, it is inevitable to communicate with other people. Implementing effective communication is one of the most important methods to establish friendly relationships. To do this, not only should we practise the skills of talking, but more vital, we need to learn to be a good listener. And this is what my lecture's topic is:being a good listener.
First of all, listening to others carefully shows your respect. Also, it improves understanding to achieve the good interpersonal relationship. If you listen to your parents or your children, then you could know them better and the generation gap would be shallower. If you are a theacher, listening to your studens makes you can understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be colser. While studying, listening to other classmates is a good way to promote your friendship and improve your study. As you can see, being a good listener has so many advantages. So how to do it? Here are some suggestions:above all, listen to others with your heart rather than just your ears. And do not stare at anywhere else but others' eyes. Last but not least, you can cut in with a few words when you feel it's needed.
Here's all my speech today. Seems that all of you are good listeners, thank you for your listening.

Corrected essay:
Good evening my dear schoolmates and teachers. My name is A and I'm from the graduating class. I'm extremely honoured to stand here to make a speech. Living in this modern society, no matter if we want to, it is inevitable to communicate with other people. Implementing effective communication is one of the most important methods to establish friendly relationships. To do this, not only should we practise the skills of talking, but more vitally, we need to learn to be a good listener. And this is what my lecture's topic is: being a good listener.
First of all, listening to others carefully shows your respect. Also, it improves understanding to achieve good interpersonal relationship. If you listen to your parents or your children, then you could know them better and the generation gap would be shallower. If you are a teacher, listening to your students makes you understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be closer. While studying, listening to other classmates is a good way to promote your friendship and improve your study. As you can see, being a good listener has so many advantages. So how to do it? Here are some suggestions: above all, listen to others with your heart rather than just your ears. And do not stare anywhere else but at others' eyes. Last but not least, you can cut in with a few words when you feel it's needed.
Here's all my speech today. It seems that all of you are good listeners. Thank you for your listening.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My name is A even from the graduating class.
correct_sentence: My name is A and I'm from the graduating class.
error: even
correction: and I'm
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'I am from the graduating class'. The original sentence uses 〈even〉 to connect two clauses, leading to logical confusion. Proper connection requires the conjunction 『and』 to introduce a parallel structure. Therefore, 〈even〉 needs to be changed to 『and I'm』 to form a complete sentence structure, in order to conform to the semantics.

error_sentence: To do this, not only should we practise the skills of talking, but more vital, we need to learn to be a good listener.
correct_sentence: To do this, not only should we practise the skills of talking, but more vitally, we need to learn to be a good listener.
error: vital
correction: vitally
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈vital〉 is an adjective, but an adverbial form is needed here; therefore, 〈vital〉 in the original text needs to be changed to the adverb 『vitally』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Also, it improves understanding to achieve the good interpersonal relationship.
correct_sentence: Also, it improves understanding to achieve good interpersonal relationship.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, abstract concepts do not require specific reference. The original sentence's 〈interpersonal relationship〉 is an abstract concept, so the redundant determiner 〈the〉 needs to be deleted to make the expression more in line with idiomatic English grammar.

error_sentence: If you are a theacher, listening to your studens makes you can understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be colser.
correct_sentence: If you are a teacher, listening to your students makes you understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be closer.
error: theacher
correction: teacher
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'teacher'. Therefore, 〈theacher〉 is a misspelling of 『teacher』, and 〈theacher〉 needs to be changed to 『teacher』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: If you are a theacher, listening to your studens makes you can understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be colser.
correct_sentence: If you are a teacher, listening to your students makes you understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be closer.
error: studens
correction: students
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'students'. Therefore, 〈studens〉 is a misspelling of 『students』, and 〈studens〉 needs to be changed to 『students』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: If you are a theacher, listening to your studens makes you can understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be colser.
correct_sentence: If you are a teacher, listening to your students makes you understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be closer.
error: can
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence 〈makes you can understand〉 has verb redundancy. 〈can〉 disrupts the grammatical logic of the sentence and should be deleted, changing it to 『makes you understand』 to conform to English grammar.

error_sentence: If you are a theacher, listening to your studens makes you can understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be colser.
correct_sentence: If you are a teacher, listening to your students makes you understand what they are thinking about so that your relationships could be closer.
error: colser
correction: closer
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that the intention here is to express 'closer'. Therefore, 〈colser〉 is a misspelling of 『closer』, and 〈colser〉 needs to be changed to 『closer』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: And do not stare at anywhere else but others' eyes.
correct_sentence: And do not stare anywhere else but at others' eyes.
error: at
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈stare〉 is a transitive verb and can directly take an object. Therefore, the redundant preposition 〈at〉 should be deleted, changing it to 『stare anywhere』 to conform to grammar.

error_sentence: And do not stare at anywhere else but others' eyes.
correct_sentence: And do not stare anywhere else but at others' eyes.
correction: at
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, in a comparative structure, 〈stare〉 needs to be connected to the object via the preposition 〈at〉. Therefore, 『at』 should be added before 〈others' eyes〉 to form a complete prepositional phrase, making the meaning of the sentence clear.

error_sentence: Seems that all of you are good listeners, thank you for your listening.
correct_sentence: It seems that all of you are good listeners.
error: Seems
correction: It seems
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, the original sentence lacks a subject, making it incomplete. Therefore, 『It』 is added as a formal subject, so that the 『It seems that...』 structure conforms to English subject-verb norms.

error_sentence: Seems that all of you are good listeners, thank you for your listening.
correct_sentence: It seems that all of you are good listeners. Thank you for your listening.
error: , thank
correction: . Thank
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentences 〈Seems that all of you are good listeners〉 and 〈thank you for your listening〉 have complete subject-verb structures. A comma 〈,〉 cannot be used to separate two independent sentences. Therefore, 〈, thank〉 needs to be changed to 『. Thank』 to conform to English grammar rules.