Writing prompt: My Hometown

Student essay:
Hollo,everybody.Today I will introduce my hometown to you.
Myhometown is Qingdao.Qindgao is a very beautiful city in China.Qingdao is near the sea.And I always play in the sea.There is the subway in Qingdao.Qingdao give me a warm feeling.Qingdao is one of the most living cities I have ever seen.A lot of people from other cities say Qingdao is very beautiful.A I agree with them.In my impression of Qingdao environmental is more protection than before.So I wish Qingdao will be more beautiful.
This is my hometown.What about you?I want to listen to you.

Corrected essay:
Hello, everybody. Today I will introduce my hometown to you.
My hometown is Qingdao. Qingdao is a very beautiful city in China. Qingdao is near the sea. And I always play in the sea. There is a subway in Qingdao. Qingdao gives me a warm feeling. Qingdao is one of the most livable cities I have ever seen. A lot of people from other cities say Qingdao is very beautiful. And I agree with them. In my impression, Qingdao's environment is more protected than before. So I wish Qingdao will be more beautiful.
This is my hometown. What about you? I want to listen to you.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Hollo,everybody.
correct_sentence: Hello, everybody.
error: Hollo
correction: Hello
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that the intended expression here is 'hello', therefore 〈Hollo〉 is a misspelling of 『Hello』, and it needs to be changed to 『Hello』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Myhometown is Qingdao.
correct_sentence: My hometown is Qingdao.
error: Myhometown
correction: My hometown
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is required between words. The original sentence 〈Myhometown〉 lacks the necessary space, so the conjoined 〈Myhometown〉 is changed to 『My hometown』 to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: Qindgao is a very beautiful city in China.
correct_sentence: Qingdao is a very beautiful city in China.
error: Qindgao
correction: Qingdao
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is clear that the intended expression here is 'Qingdao', therefore 〈Qindgao〉 is a misspelling of 『Qingdao』, and it needs to be changed to 『Qingdao』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: There is the subway in Qingdao.
correct_sentence: There is a subway in Qingdao.
error: the
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, when mentioning 'subway' for the first time, the indefinite article 『a』 should be used instead of the definite article 〈the〉, therefore 〈the〉 is changed to 『a』 to conform to English habits.

error_sentence: Qingdao give me a warm feeling.
correct_sentence: Qingdao gives me a warm feeling.
error: give
correction: gives
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error. The subject 〈Qingdao〉 is third-person singular, and the original predicate 〈give〉 is in the third-person plural form, therefore the verb 〈give〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『gives』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: Qingdao is one of the most living cities I have ever seen.
correct_sentence: Qingdao is one of the most livable cities I have ever seen.
error: living
correction: livable
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adjective Error: According to the context, the intended meaning here is 'livable'. The adjective 〈living〉 does not fit the context semantically; the correct expression for a livable city should use 『livable』, therefore 〈living〉 needs to be changed to 『livable』 to fit the meaning.

error_sentence: A I agree with them.
correct_sentence: And I agree with them.
error: A
correction: And
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English expression habits, the conjunction 〈A〉 at the beginning of the sentence does not meet the logical connection requirements, therefore 〈A〉 needs to be changed to 『And』 to connect the context and maintain sentence coherence.

error_sentence: In my impression of Qingdao environmental is more protection than before.
correct_sentence: In my impression, Qingdao's environment is more protected than before.
error: of Qingdao environmental
correction: , Qingdao's environment
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, when 〈In my impression〉 introduces a sentence, the introductory phrase and the main clause should be separated by a comma, therefore 〈In my impression〉 needs to be changed to 『In my impression,』 to conform to expression habits; ② Sentence Structure Error: According to English expression habits, the phrase 〈of Qingdao environmental〉 is grammatically incorrect, it needs to be adjusted to 『Qingdao's environment』 and a comma added to separate the introductory phrase, to conform to expression habits; ② Noun Possessive Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'Qingdao's environment'. The original phrase 〈of Qingdao environmental〉 cannot accurately express this, therefore it needs to be changed to 『Qingdao's environment』 to indicate possession.

error_sentence: In my impression of Qingdao environmental is more protection than before.
correct_sentence: In my impression, Qingdao's environment is more protected than before.
error: protection
correction: protected
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈protection〉 is a noun form, whereas here the passive voice is needed to express the state of environmental protection, it should be changed to the verb form 『protected』, therefore 〈protection〉 needs to be changed to 『protected』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: What about you?I want to listen to you.
correct_sentence: What about you? I want to listen to you.
error: you?I
correction: you? I
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, there needs to be a space between punctuation and a word. The original sentence 〈you?I〉 lacks a space, therefore 〈you?I〉 needs to be changed to 『you? I』 to conform to writing conventions.