Writing prompt: After-School Activities

Student essay:
I take part in two activities.One activity I have is sports.After I went to high school.I decided to do exercise everyday in order to keep healthy.The exercice I do inclouds running,swimming,jogging and so on.I can also have a good time when I am doing exercise.The other activity is watching movies.Specially,all the movies I watch speak English.I try my better to comprehense what characters say all the time.In my opinion,this way can make me learn English better.
For choosing right activitise,I have some pieces of advice to give.First of all,choose what you like so you will know the fun of activities.Othersides,you should find a balance between hobby and study.We should avoid activities affect oue study.It's important to arrvenge time .

Corrected essay:
I take part in two activities. One activity I have is sports. After I went to high school, I decided to do exercise everyday in order to keep healthy. The exercise I do includes running, swimming, jogging and so on. I can also have a good time when I am doing exercise. The other activity is watching movies. Specifically, all the movies I watch are in English. I try my best to comprehend what the characters say all the time. In my opinion, this way can make me learn English better.
For choosing the right activities, I have some pieces of advice to give. First of all, choose what you like so you will know the fun of activities. On the other hand, you should find a balance between hobbies and study. We should avoid activities that affect our study. It's important to arrange time.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: After I went to high school.
correct_sentence: After I went to high school, I decided to do exercise everyday in order to keep healthy.
error: .
correction: ,

error_sentence: The exercice I do inclouds running,swimming,jogging and so on.
correct_sentence: The exercise I do includes running, swimming, jogging and so on.
error: exercice
correction: exercise
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is known that the intended expression here is “运动”, therefore 〈exercice〉 is a misspelling of 『exercise』, and it needs to be changed from 〈exercice〉 to 『exercise』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: The exercice I do inclouds running,swimming,jogging and so on.
correct_sentence: The exercise I do includes running, swimming, jogging and so on.
error: inclouds
correction: includes
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is known that the intended expression here is “包括”, therefore 〈inclouds〉 is a misspelling of 『includes』, and it needs to be changed from 〈inclouds〉 to 『includes』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Specially,all the movies I watch speak English.
correct_sentence: Specifically, all the movies I watch are in English.
error: Specially
correction: Specifically
error_type: Adverb Error
error_description: Adverb Error: 〈Specially〉 means “特意地”, while the intended meaning here is “具体来说”; the adverb 『Specifically』 should be used, therefore 〈Specially〉 is changed to 『Specifically』 to correctly express the meaning.

error_sentence: Specially,all the movies I watch speak English.
correct_sentence: Specifically, all the movies I watch are in English.
error: speak
correction: are in
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically confused and structurally incorrect; considering the context, it is known that the intended expression is “我观看的所有电影都是英文的”; 〈speak〉, when used to describe language, should have a person as the subject, therefore 〈speak〉 is changed to 『are in』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: I try my better to comprehense what characters say all the time.
correct_sentence: I try my best to comprehend what the characters say all the time.
error: better to comprehense what
correction: best to comprehend what the
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Adjective Error: The correct fixed phrase is “try one's best”, therefore 〈better〉 is changed to 『best』 to conform to idiomatic expression; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is known that the intended expression here is “理解”, therefore 〈comprehense〉 is a misspelling of 『comprehend』, and it needs to be changed from 〈comprehense〉 to 『comprehend』 to make the sentence coherent; ③ Determiner Error: This specifically refers to the characters in the movie, which needs to be modified by a definite article, therefore 『the』 is added after 〈what〉 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: For choosing right activitise,I have some pieces of advice to give.
correct_sentence: For choosing the right activities, I have some pieces of advice to give.
error: right activitise
correction: the right activities
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Determiner Error: 〈right activitise〉 as a specific object needs to be modified by the definite article 『the』, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈right〉 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is known that the intended expression here is “活动”, therefore 〈activitise〉 is a misspelling of 『activities』, and it needs to be changed from 〈activitise〉 to 『activities』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Othersides,you should find a balance between hobby and study.
correct_sentence: On the other hand, you should find a balance between hobbies and study.
error: Othersides
correction: On the other hand
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: The contrastive logical conjunction here is incorrect; the correct expression is 『On the other hand』, therefore 〈Othersides〉 is changed to 『On the other hand』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: Othersides,you should find a balance between hobby and study.
correct_sentence: On the other hand, you should find a balance between hobbies and study.
error: hobby
correction: hobbies
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: The plural form should be used here to refer to multiple hobbies, therefore 〈hobby〉 is changed to 『hobbies』 to correctly express the meaning.

error_sentence: We should avoid activities affect oue study.
correct_sentence: We should avoid activities that affect our study.
error: affect oue
correction: that affect our
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Relative Word Error: The attributive clause here is missing the relative pronoun 『that』 to connect the main clause and the subordinate clause, therefore 『that』 is added before 〈affect〉 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is known that the intended expression here is “我们的”, therefore 〈oue〉 is a misspelling of 『our』, and it needs to be changed from 〈oue〉 to 『our』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: It's important to arrvenge time .
correct_sentence: It's important to arrange time.
error: arrvenge
correction: arrange
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is known that the intended expression here is “安排”, therefore 〈arrvenge〉 is a misspelling of 『arrange』, and it needs to be changed from 〈arrvenge〉 to 『arrange』 to make the sentence coherent.