Writing prompt: Spring Festival

Student essay:
Dear Jone ,
Do you known which is the most important festival in my country ?Great !It's the Spring Festival ,of course .Now ,we are looking forward to having our festival .I guess you must be interested in this festival so let me tell you something about it .
As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck .when it coming ,people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends.we eat dumpling and many kind of food together .then most of the people visit their neighbors, friends,families .at midnight we set off fireworks which can bring us happiness and good luck .
now ,I hope you have some idea if Chinese Spring Festival.
best wishes
yours,zhang peng

Corrected essay:
Dear Jone,
Do you know which is the most important festival in my country? Great! It's the Spring Festival, of course. Now, we are looking forward to having our festival. I guess you must be interested in this festival, so let me tell you something about it.
As you know, the Spring Festival is a traditional festival which has existed for thousands of years. It's important for Chinese people to get together to celebrate the festival. People prepare a lot for it before its coming. We clean our house, which we think can bring us good luck. When it is coming, people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends. We eat dumplings and many kinds of food together. Then most people visit their neighbors, friends and families. At midnight, we set off fireworks, which can bring us happiness and good luck.
Now, I hope you have some idea of the Chinese Spring Festival.
Best wishes,
Yours, Zhang Peng

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Dear Jone ,
Do you known which is the most important festival in my country ?
correct_sentence: Dear Jone,
Do you know which is the most important festival in my country?
error: known
correction: know
error_type: Other Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Other Error: 〈Do〉 is an auxiliary verb and should be followed by the base form of the verb, so 〈known〉 is changed to 『know』 to conform to grammatical structure and semantic requirements.

error_sentence: It's the Spring Festival ,of course .Now ,we are looking forward to having our festival
correct_sentence: It's the Spring Festival, of course. Now, we are looking forward to having our festival.
error: .Now
correction: . Now
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so 〈.Now〉 is changed to 『. Now』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: .I guess you must be interested in this festival
correct_sentence: Now, we are looking forward to having our festival. I guess you must be interested in this festival, so let me tell you something about it.

error: .I
correction: . I
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so 〈.I〉 is changed to 『. I』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: .I guess you must be interested in this festival so let me tell you something about it .

correct_sentence: I guess you must be interested in this festival, so let me tell you something about it.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A comma 『,』 is needed here to separate the main clause and the adverbial clause of result, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈festival〉 to maintain sentence coherence.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: As you know, the Spring Festival is a traditional festival which has existed for thousands of years.
error: spring festival
correction: the Spring Festival
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, proper nouns should be capitalized. 〈spring festival〉 is a proper noun meaning 'Spring Festival', and the first letter of both words should be capitalized, so 〈spring festival〉 is changed to 『Spring Festival』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: As you know, the Spring Festival is a traditional festival which has existed for thousands of years.
error: been
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: 〈exist〉 is an intransitive verb and cannot be used in the passive voice; the verb 〈been〉 is redundant here, so 〈been〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical structure.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: As you know, the Spring Festival is a traditional festival which has existed for thousands of years. It's important for Chinese people to get together to celebrate the festival.
error: thousand years.it
correction: thousands of years. It
error_type: Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Number Error: The correct collocation for expressing an approximate number is 『thousands of』, so 〈thousand〉 is changed to 『thousands of 』 to correctly express the meaning; ② Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so a space is added after 〈years.〉 to conform to writing conventions; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈it〉 is changed to 『It』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: It's important for Chinese people to get together to celebrate the festival.
correction: people
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: 〈Chinese〉 as an adjective needs to be used with a noun, so 『people』 is added after 〈Chinese〉 to complete the meaning.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: It's important for Chinese people to get together to celebrate the festival. People prepare a lot for it before its coming.
error: .people
correction: . People
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so a space is added after 〈.〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈people〉 is changed to 『People』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: People prepare a lot for it before its coming. We clean our house, which we think can bring us good luck.
error: .we
correction: . We
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so a space is added after 〈.〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈we〉 is changed to 『We』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: We clean our house, which we think can bring us good luck.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a comma is needed before a non-restrictive relative clause, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈house〉 to separate the two sentence components.

error_sentence: As you know ,spring festival is a traditional festival which has been existed for thousand years.it's important for Chinese to get together to celebrate the festival .people prepare a lot for it before its coming .we clean our house which we think can bring our good luck
correct_sentence: We clean our house, which we think can bring us good luck.
error: our
correction: us
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The verb 〈bring〉 requires the objective case of the pronoun, so 〈our〉 is changed to 『us』 to conform to grammar rules.

error_sentence: .when it coming ,people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends.we eat dumpling and many kind of food together .then
correct_sentence: We clean our house, which we think can bring us good luck. When it is coming, people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends.
error: .when it
correction: . When it is
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so a space is added after 〈.〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈when〉 is changed to 『When』 to conform to conventions; ③ Auxiliary Error: Based on the context, the present continuous tense is used here, so 『is』 is added after 〈it〉 to form a complete predicate.

error_sentence: .when it coming ,people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends.we eat dumpling and many kind of food together .then
correct_sentence: When it is coming, people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends. We eat dumplings and many kinds of food together.
error: friends.we eat dumpling
correction: friends. We eat dumplings
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so a space is added after 〈.〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈we〉 is changed to 『We』 to conform to conventions; ③ Noun Number Error: In everyday context, we usually eat more than one dumpling, so the plural form is needed here; thus, 〈dumpling〉 is changed to 『dumplings』 to conform to grammar rules.

error_sentence: .when it coming ,people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends.we eat dumpling and many kind of food together .then
correct_sentence: We eat dumplings and many kinds of food together.
error: kind
correction: kinds
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, the quantifier 〈many〉 requires a plural noun, so 〈kind〉 is changed to 『kinds』 to indicate multiple types of food.

error_sentence: .when it coming ,people dress up and celebrate it with families or friends.we eat dumpling and many kind of food together .then most of the people visit their neighbors, friends,families .at
correct_sentence: We eat dumplings and many kinds of food together. Then most people visit their neighbors, friends and families.
error: .then most of the
correction: . Then most
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Space Error: The period 〈.〉 is missing a space before the following word, so a space is added after 〈.〉 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈then〉 is changed to 『Then』 to conform to conventions; ③ Word Redundancy Error: 〈most of the people〉 is incorrect because 『most people』 is sufficient to express 'most people', so 〈of the〉 is deleted to make the expression more concise.

error_sentence: most of the people visit their neighbors, friends,families .at midnight we set off fireworks which can bring us happiness and good luck .

correct_sentence: Then most people visit their neighbors, friends and families. At midnight, we set off fireworks, which can bring us happiness and good luck.

error: ,families .at midnight
correction: and families. At midnight,
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, the last two items in a list of coordinate nouns should be connected by 『and』, so 〈,families〉 is changed to 『and families』 to conform to grammar rules; ② Space Error: A period should immediately follow 〈families〉 here, so 〈families .〉 is changed to 『families.』 to conform to writing conventions; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈at〉 is changed to 『At』 to conform to conventions; ④ Punctuation Error: 〈At midnight〉 is an adverbial of time indicating a specific time; when a sentence begins with an adverbial of time, a comma is usually added after it to separate it from the main clause, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈midnight〉.

error_sentence: midnight we set off fireworks which can bring us happiness and good luck .

correct_sentence: At midnight, we set off fireworks, which can bring us happiness and good luck.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a comma is needed before a non-restrictive relative clause, so a comma 『,』 is added after 〈fireworks〉 to clarify the meaning.

error_sentence: now ,I hope you have some idea if Chinese Spring Festival.

correct_sentence: Now, I hope you have some idea of the Chinese Spring Festival.

error: now
correction: Now
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence should be capitalized, so 〈now〉 is changed to 『Now』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: now ,I hope you have some idea if Chinese Spring Festival.

correct_sentence: Now, I hope you have some idea of the Chinese Spring Festival.

error: if
correction: of the
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: The fixed phrase 『idea of』 means 'concept about...', so 〈if〉 is changed to 『of』 to conform to the intended meaning; ② Determiner Error: The definite article 『the』 should be added here to specifically refer to the Chinese Spring Festival, so 『the』 is added before 〈Chinese〉 to conform to grammar rules.

error_sentence: best wishes
yours,zhang peng
correct_sentence: Best wishes,
Yours, Zhang Peng
error: best wishes
yours,zhang peng
correction: Best wishes,
Yours, Zhang Peng
error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Format Error: The closing salutation of a letter needs a new line and a comma, so 〈best wishes yours,〉 is changed to 『Best wishes, Yours,』 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of both the surname and given name in a Chinese name should be capitalized, so 〈zhang peng〉 is changed to 『Zhang Peng』 to conform to conventions.