Writing prompt: An Unforgettable Thing during Winter Holiday

Student essay:
This winter holiday,I went to Beijing with my parents by train.It's interesting to enjoy the scenery through the windows on the train.When we arrived at the southern train station,it was 9:00 am.We took the underground to Nanluo Guxiang.Luckily,the subway of Beijing wasn't very crowded on that day.Soon,we reached there.Nanluo Guxiang is about 800 metres in length.There are various kinds of delicious food,such as French fries,fried chicken,cheese,Beijing tradition noodles and all sorts of manual
candy.How tasty they are!In the afternoon,we still went to Yuanming Yuan by underground.After twenty minutes,we got to the gate of Yuanming Yuan.We bought three tickts,and entered the "big garden".It's really large!There are three parts in it:Changchun Yuan,Wanchun Yuan and Qichun Yuan.In fact,Qinghua Yuan is also part of Yuanming Yuan.We went for a walk in it and we've felt traditional culture of Beijing.In the evening,we went back to Tianjin by train.We all had a good day !

Corrected essay:
This winter holiday, I went to Beijing with my parents by train. It was interesting to enjoy the scenery through the windows on the train. When we arrived at the Beijing South Railway Station, it was 9:00 am. We took the underground to Nanluogu Lane. Luckily, the subway of Beijing wasn't very crowded on that day. Soon, we reached there. Nanluogu Lane is about 800 metres in length. There are various kinds of delicious food, such as French fries, fried chicken, cheese, Beijing traditional noodles and all sorts of manual candy. How tasty they are! In the afternoon, we also went to the Old Summer Palace by underground. After twenty minutes, we got to the gate of the Old Summer Palace. We bought three tickets and entered the "big garden." It's really large! There are three parts in it: the Garden of Eternal Spring, the Garden of Blossoming Spring and the Garden of Elegant Spring. In fact, the Tsinghua University is also part of the Old Summer Palace. We went for a walk in it and we felt the traditional culture of Beijing. In the evening, we went back to Tianjin by train. We all had a good day!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: It's interesting to enjoy the scenery through the windows on the train.
correct_sentence: It was interesting to enjoy the scenery through the windows on the train.
error: 's
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English tense rules, past events should be described using the past tense. In the original sentence, 〈It's〉 is a contraction of 〈It is〉, which is in the present tense and does not fit the context of describing a past experience, constituting a verb tense error. Therefore, 〈's〉 is changed to 『was』 to maintain tense consistency and accurately reflect that the action occurred in the past.

error_sentence: When we arrived at the southern train station,it was 9:00 am.
correct_sentence: When we arrived at the Beijing South Railway Station, it was 9:00 am.
error: southern train station
correction: Beijing South Railway Station
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the rules for using nouns in English, the common noun phrase 〈southern train station〉 cannot accurately express a specific location name; when describing a specific station, a proper noun is needed for precise reference. Therefore, 〈southern train station〉 is changed to 『Beijing South Railway Station』 to clearly refer to the specific location of Beijing South Railway Station, making the expression accurate and standard.

error_sentence: We took the underground to Nanluo Guxiang.
correct_sentence: We took the underground to Nanluogu Lane.
error: Nanluo Guxiang
correction: Nanluogu Lane
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to English place name conventions, the Pinyin 〈Nanluo Guxiang〉 does not conform to English place name expression habits and needs to be replaced with the standard English translation 『Nanluogu Lane』; ② Noun Error: The noun 〈Nanluo Guxiang〉 does not use the correct English translation; to comply with international conventions and standard translation, it needs to be changed to 『Nanluogu Lane』.

error_sentence: Nanluo Guxiang is about 800 metres in length.
correct_sentence: Nanluogu Lane is about 800 metres in length.
error: Nanluo Guxiang
correction: Nanluogu Lane
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the standard translation rules for English place names, the noun 〈Nanluo Guxiang〉 does not use the correct English translation; to comply with international conventions and standard translation, it needs to be changed to 『Nanluogu Lane』.

error_sentence: There are various kinds of delicious food,such as French fries,fried chicken,cheese,Beijing tradition noodles and all sorts of manual
candy.
correct_sentence: There are various kinds of delicious food, such as French fries, fried chicken, cheese, Beijing traditional noodles and all sorts of manual candy.
error: tradition
correction: traditional
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to English grammar rules, a noun cannot directly function as an adjective to modify another noun. In the original sentence, the noun 〈tradition〉 is mistakenly used as an adjective to modify 〈noodles〉; the adjective form 『traditional』, meaning 'traditional', should be used. Therefore, 〈tradition〉 is changed to 『traditional』 to comply with grammar rules.

error_sentence: There are various kinds of delicious food,such as French fries,fried chicken,cheese,Beijing tradition noodles and all sorts of manual
candy.
correct_sentence: There are various kinds of delicious food, such as French fries, fried chicken, cheese, Beijing traditional noodles and all sorts of manual candy.
error: 

error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: null.

error_sentence: How tasty they are!In the afternoon,we still went to Yuanming Yuan by underground.
correct_sentence: How tasty they are! In the afternoon, we also went to the Old Summer Palace by underground.
error: are!In
correction: are! In
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space is required after an exclamation mark 〈!〉 to separate sentences. In the original sentence, 〈are!In〉 lacks a space, causing improper separation between punctuation and the word. Therefore, a space needs to be added between 〈are!〉 and 〈In〉, correcting it to 『are! In』 to comply with writing conventions.

error_sentence: How tasty they are!In the afternoon,we still went to Yuanming Yuan by underground.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, we also went to the Old Summer Palace by underground.
error: still
correction: also
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adverb Error: According to the sentence meaning, the sentence needs to express a parallel action of 'also went'; the adverb 〈still〉 means 'still' or 'yet', indicating a continuous state, which is inconsistent with the contextual logic. 『also』 means 'also', which better reflects the logical relationship of the sentence and emphasizes additional information. Therefore, 〈still〉 is changed to 『also』 to accurately express the meaning.

error_sentence: How tasty they are!In the afternoon,we still went to Yuanming Yuan by underground.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, we also went to the Old Summer Palace by underground.
error: Yuanming Yuan
correction: the Old Summer Palace
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the standard translation rules for English place names, the noun phrase 〈Yuanming Yuan〉 does not use the common English translation; to comply with standard translation rules, it needs to be changed to 『the Old Summer Palace』.

error_sentence: After twenty minutes,we got to the gate of Yuanming Yuan.
correct_sentence: After twenty minutes, we got to the gate of the Old Summer Palace.
error: Yuanming Yuan
correction: the Old Summer Palace
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the standard translation rules for English place names, the noun phrase 〈Yuanming Yuan〉 does not use the common English translation; to comply with standard translation rules, it needs to be changed to 『the Old Summer Palace』.

error_sentence: We bought three tickts,and entered the "big garden".
correct_sentence: We bought three tickets and entered the "big garden."
error: tickts,
correction: tickets
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express 'tickets'; therefore, 〈tickts〉 is a misspelling of 『tickets』 and needs to be changed to 『tickets』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: We bought three tickts,and entered the "big garden".
correct_sentence: We bought three tickets and entered the "big garden."
error: garden".
correction: garden."
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, the period should be placed inside the quotation marks. In the original sentence, the punctuation order in 〈garden"〉 is incorrect; it needs to be changed to 『garden."』 to comply with American English punctuation conventions.

error_sentence: It's really large!There are three parts in it:Changchun Yuan,Wanchun Yuan and Qichun Yuan.
correct_sentence: It's really large! There are three parts in it: the Garden of Eternal Spring, the Garden of Blossoming Spring and the Garden of Elegant Spring.
error: large!There
correction: large! There
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is required after an exclamation mark 〈!〉 to separate sentences. The original phrase 〈large!There〉 lacks a space, causing improper separation between punctuation and the word. Therefore, a space needs to be added between 〈large!〉 and 〈There〉, correcting it to 『large! There』 to comply with writing conventions.

error_sentence: It's really large!There are three parts in it:Changchun Yuan,Wanchun Yuan and Qichun Yuan.
correct_sentence: There are three parts in it: the Garden of Eternal Spring, the Garden of Blossoming Spring and the Garden of Elegant Spring.
error: Changchun Yuan,Wanchun Yuan and Qichun Yuan
correction: the Garden of Eternal Spring, the Garden of Blossoming Spring and the Garden of Elegant Spring
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the translation rules for English place names, the Chinese names 〈Changchun Yuan〉, 〈Wanchun Yuan〉, and 〈Qichun Yuan〉 need to be replaced with internationally common English names. The original noun phrases do not use standard English translations; therefore, 〈Changchun Yuan〉 is changed to 『Changchun the Garden of Eternal Spring』, 〈Wanchun Yuan〉 is changed to 『Wanchun the Garden of Blossoming Spring』, and 〈Qichun Yuan〉 is changed to 『the Garden of Elegant Spring』 to comply with international conventions and standard translation rules.

error_sentence: In fact,Qinghua Yuan is also part of Yuanming Yuan.
correct_sentence: In fact, the Tsinghua University is also part of the Old Summer Palace.
error: Qinghua Yuan
correction: the Tsinghua University
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the standard translation rules for English institutional names, the noun phrase 〈Qinghua Yuan〉 is an incorrect name; the correct English name is 『Tsinghua University』, and 『the』 needs to be added to indicate the university name. Therefore, 〈Qinghua Yuan〉 is changed to 『the Tsinghua University』 to use the standard English name and accurately express its meaning.

error_sentence: In fact,Qinghua Yuan is also part of Yuanming Yuan.
correct_sentence: In fact, the Tsinghua University is also part of the Old Summer Palace.
error: Yuanming Yuan
correction: the Old Summer Palace
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to international conventions and standard translation rules, the noun phrase 〈Yuanming Yuan〉 does not use the common English translation; to comply with standard translation rules, it needs to be changed to 『the Old Summer Palace』.

error_sentence: We went for a walk in it and we've felt traditional culture of Beijing.
correct_sentence: We went for a walk in it and we felt the traditional culture of Beijing.
error: 've felt
correction: felt the
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the sentence uses past tense narration; in the original sentence, 〈've felt〉 is in the present perfect tense, which does not meet the requirement for tense consistency and needs to be changed to the past tense 『felt』; ② Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, a definite article is required when referring to a specific item; in the original sentence, the definite article is missing before 〈culture〉 and 『the』 needs to be added to specifically refer to the traditional culture of Beijing.