Writing prompt: Giving Advice

Student essay:
Dear Wang Li:
Nice to meet you Wang Li.Learning English is a good way to improve your culture level.Let me give you some advice.
Remembering new words isn't a easy thing.It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebooks or other place you may see it everyday. I suggest you read them aloud and use them as much as possible.
I believe,if you remember them by heart and do it just like i tell you.You will be success.
From,
Mr.Knowall

Corrected essay:
Dear Wang Li,
Nice to meet you, Wang Li. Learning English is a good way to improve your cultural level. Let me give you some advice.
Remembering new words isn't an easy thing. It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebook or another place you may see every day. I suggest you read them aloud and use them as much as possible.
I believe if you remember them by heart and do it just like I tell you, you will be successful.
From,
Mr. Knowall

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Dear Wang Li:
Nice to meet you Wang Li.
correct_sentence: Dear Wang Li,
Nice to meet you, Wang Li.
error: :
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, a comma 〈,〉 should be used after the salutation in a formal letter, not a colon 〈:〉; therefore, 〈Dear Wang Li:〉 in the original sentence needs to be changed to 『Dear Wang Li,』 to comply with English letter format standards.

error_sentence: Dear Wang Li:
Nice to meet you Wang Li.
correct_sentence: Dear Wang Li,
Nice to meet you, Wang Li.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, a comma should be used to connect the greeting 〈Nice to meet you〉 and the addressee 〈Wang Li〉; therefore, 〈Nice to meet you Wang Li〉 in the original sentence is changed to 『Nice to meet you, Wang Li』 to conform to English punctuation rules.

error_sentence: Learning English is a good way to improve your culture level.
correct_sentence: Learning English is a good way to improve your cultural level.
error: culture
correction: cultural
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: Based on the context, 〈culture〉 is a noun, while an adjective is needed here as an attributive to describe level; it should be changed to the adjective 『cultural』. Therefore, 〈culture〉 needs to be changed to 『cultural』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: Remembering new words isn't a easy thing.
correct_sentence: Remembering new words isn't an easy thing.
error: a
correction: an
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, words starting with a vowel sound must be preceded by the indefinite article 『an』. In the original sentence, 〈easy〉 starts with a vowel sound, so the article 〈a〉 should be changed to 『an』 to comply with grammar.

error_sentence: It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebooks or other place you may see it everyday.
correct_sentence: It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebook or another place you may see every day.
error: notebooks or other
correction: notebook or another
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the contextual logic, the singular form 『notebook』 should be used here instead of the plural 〈notebooks〉; therefore, 〈notebooks〉 needs to be changed to 『notebook』 to fit the context. ② Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, 『another』 is used before singular countable nouns to indicate a general reference, while 〈other〉 requires a plural noun. The original sentence refers to another option, so 〈other place〉 needs to be changed to 『another place』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebooks or other place you may see it everyday.
correct_sentence: It's a good idea to write down new words in your notebook or another place you may see every day.
error: it everyday
correction: every day
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to the context, 〈place〉 in the original sentence is already the antecedent in the relative clause, so there is no need to repeat 〈it〉; 〈it〉 causes word redundancy and therefore needs to be deleted to make the sentence more concise. ② PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈everyday〉 is an adjective meaning 'daily', while here the adverbial phrase 『every day』 meaning 'each day' is needed as an adverbial of time to modify the verb 〈see〉; therefore, 〈everyday〉 needs to be changed to 『every day』.

error_sentence: I believe,if you remember them by heart and do it just like i tell you.
correct_sentence: I believe if you remember them by heart and do it just like I tell you, you will be successful.

error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, 〈I believe〉 and the following clause do not need to be separated by a comma; therefore, the extra comma 〈,〉 is deleted to make the sentence structure more compact.

error_sentence: I believe,if you remember them by heart and do it just like i tell you.
correct_sentence: I believe if you remember them by heart and do it just like I tell you, you will be successful.

error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun 〈i〉 should always be capitalized as 『I』; therefore, 〈i〉 is changed to 『I』 to comply with writing standards.

error_sentence: I believe,if you remember them by heart and do it just like i tell you. You will be success.

correct_sentence: I believe if you remember them by heart and do it just like I tell you, you will be successful.

error: .You
correction: , you
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, in an adverbial clause of result, the main clause 〈I believe...〉 and the clause 〈you will...〉 need to be connected by a comma; therefore, 〈.You〉 needs to be changed to 『, you』 to comply with grammar.

error_sentence: You will be success.

correct_sentence: I believe if you remember them by heart and do it just like I tell you, you will be successful.

error: success
correction: successful
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈success〉 is a noun form, while an adjective is needed here to describe that 'you are successful'; it should be changed to the adjective 『successful』. Therefore, 〈success〉 needs to be changed to 『successful』 to fit the context.