Writing prompt: A Book Review of The Lost World

Student essay:
The Lost World is one of the greatest books I ever read, by Arthur Conan Doyle. The famous English writer who has created "Sherlock Homes". The story is set in the eighteen century England.
It tells an exciting and dangerous adventure in an unknown world. The hero of the book, Malone, a young reporter for the London Daily Gazette. He wants to be famous and wants to get the scoop of the century. Professor Challenger, Professor Summerlee who are the enemies, and Lord John who is an experienced explorer. Four men go on the journey for different reasons. After through a lot of problems, they get to "The Lost World". Actually, they are stranded in the mysterious place.
My favorite part of the book is when Malone finally does something nice for the team, he wants to prove himself once again. So, he goes to the center of the land and checks it out, all alone. He has through a really exciting time, with the strange creatures and weird things, in the mid-night.
The lost World is a great book. The characters are very real, their personalities, their background, especially their feelings and ideas. Today, it is still read and loved by many people. There are even some TV dramas, movies base on the book.

Corrected essay:
The Lost World is one of the greatest books I ever read, by Arthur Conan Doyle, the famous English writer who has created "Sherlock Holmes". The story is set in the eighteenth century England.
It tells an exciting and dangerous adventure in an unknown world. The hero of the book, Malone, is a young reporter for the London Daily Gazette. He wants to be famous and wants to get the scoop of the century. Professor Challenger and Professor Summerlee are the enemies, and Lord John is an experienced explorer. These four men go on the journey for different reasons. After going through a lot of problems, they get to "The Lost World". Actually, they are stranded in the mysterious place.
My favorite part of the book is when Malone finally does something nice for the team, because he wants to prove himself once again. So, he goes to the center of the land and checks it out, all alone. He has gone through a really exciting period of time, with the strange creatures and weird things in the mid-night.
The Lost World is a great book. The characters are very real—their personalities, their background, especially their feelings and ideas. Today, it is still read and loved by many people. There are even some TV dramas and movies based on the book.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The Lost World is one of the greatest books I ever read, by Arthur Conan Doyle. The famous English writer who has created "Sherlock Homes".
correct_sentence: The Lost World is one of the greatest books I ever read, by Arthur Conan Doyle, the famous English writer who has created "Sherlock Holmes".
error: . The
correction: , the
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to the context, this is an appositive clause. The original sentence used a period to separate the appositive clause, causing a sentence structure break. Therefore, 〈. The〉 needs to be changed to 『, the』 to connect the two related sentences and make the sentence structure complete.

error_sentence: The famous English writer who has created "Sherlock Homes".
correct_sentence: The Lost World is one of the greatest books I ever read, by Arthur Conan Doyle, the famous English writer who has created "Sherlock Holmes".
error: Homes
correction: Holmes
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express a surname here. Therefore, 〈Homes〉 is a misspelling of 『Holmes』, and 〈Homes〉 needs to be changed to 『Holmes』 to make the sentence flow smoothly.

error_sentence: The story is set in the eighteen century England.

correct_sentence: The story is set in the eighteenth century England.

error: eighteen
correction: eighteenth
error_type: Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Number Error: According to the context, this means 'eighteenth century' and should use an ordinal number. The original sentence 〈eighteen〉 is a cardinal number, so 〈eighteen〉 needs to be changed to 『eighteenth』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: The hero of the book, Malone, a young reporter for the London Daily Gazette.
correct_sentence: The hero of the book, Malone, is a young reporter for the London Daily Gazette.
correction: is
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English grammar rules, a sentence requires a predicate. The original sentence 〈The hero of the book, Malone, a young reporter〉 lacks a verb to describe the state of 〈The hero〉. Therefore, 『is』 needs to be added to connect the subject and the object to comply with English grammar rules.

error_sentence: Professor Challenger, Professor Summerlee who are the enemies, and Lord John who is an experienced explorer.
correct_sentence: Professor Challenger and Professor Summerlee are the enemies, and Lord John is an experienced explorer.
error: ,
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, in the original sentence, 〈Professor Challenger〉 and 〈Professor Summerlee〉 as a parallel structure require 『and』 for connection. Therefore, the original sentence needs to add 『and』 to comply with English grammar rules.

error_sentence: Professor Challenger, Professor Summerlee who are the enemies, and Lord John who is an experienced explorer.
correct_sentence: Professor Challenger and Professor Summerlee are the enemies, and Lord John is an experienced explorer.
error: who
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, this is intended to express 'they are enemies'. The original sentence misused a relative clause structure, causing the main clause to lack a predicate. Therefore, 〈who〉 needs to be deleted and 『are the enemies』 used as the main clause predicate to make the sentence structure complete.

error_sentence: Professor Challenger, Professor Summerlee who are the enemies, and Lord John who is an experienced explorer.
correct_sentence: Professor Challenger and Professor Summerlee are the enemies, and Lord John is an experienced explorer.
error: who
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the context, this is intended to express 'experienced explorer'. The original sentence misused a relative clause structure, causing the main clause to lack a predicate. Therefore, 〈who〉 needs to be deleted and 『is an experienced explorer』 used as the main clause predicate to make the sentence structure complete.

error_sentence: Four men go on the journey for different reasons.
correct_sentence: These four men go on the journey for different reasons.
error: Four
correction: These four
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to the context, specific individuals have been mentioned previously. The definite determiner 『These』 needs to be added to refer to a clear object and avoid ambiguity. Therefore, 〈Four〉 is changed to 『These four』 to fit the meaning.

error_sentence: After through a lot of problems, they get to "The Lost World".
correct_sentence: After going through a lot of problems, they get to "The Lost World".
correction: going
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, this means 'experience a series of difficulties'. The original sentence lacks a verb, and the preposition 〈After〉 needs to be followed by a gerund form. Therefore, 〈After through〉 is changed to 『After going through』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: My favorite part of the book is when Malone finally does something nice for the team, he wants to prove himself once again.
correct_sentence: My favorite part of the book is when Malone finally does something nice for the team, because he wants to prove himself once again.
correction: because
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to the context, this means 'because'. The original sentence lacks a conjunction and cannot connect the adverbial clause of reason. Therefore, 〈,〉 needs to be changed to 『, because』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: He has through a really exciting time, with the strange creatures and weird things, in the mid-night.

correct_sentence: He has gone through a really exciting period of time, with the strange creatures and weird things in the mid-night.

correction: gone
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to the context, this means 'experience a series of difficulties'. The original sentence lacks a verb, and 〈has〉 needs to be followed by the perfect tense. Therefore, 〈has through〉 is changed to 『has gone through』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: He has through a really exciting time, with the strange creatures and weird things, in the mid-night.

correct_sentence: He has gone through a really exciting period of time, with the strange creatures and weird things in the mid-night.

correction: period of
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the context, this is intended to express 'a period of time'. The original sentence 〈time〉 is vague in meaning. Therefore, 『period of』 needs to be added to make the time range more specific and the sentence meaning clearer.

error_sentence: He has through a really exciting time, with the strange creatures and weird things, in the mid-night.

correct_sentence: He has gone through a really exciting period of time, with the strange creatures and weird things in the mid-night.

error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, when the prepositional phrase 〈in the mid-night〉 is at the end of the sentence, it does not need to be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, 〈,〉 is deleted to comply with English punctuation usage rules.

error_sentence: The lost World is a great book.
correct_sentence: The Lost World is a great book.
error: lost
correction: Lost
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of content words in book titles needs to be capitalized. Therefore, 〈The lost World〉 needs to be changed to 『The Lost World』 to comply with the convention.

error_sentence: The characters are very real, their personalities, their background, especially their feelings and ideas.
correct_sentence: The characters are very real—their personalities, their background, especially their feelings and ideas.
error: ,
correction: —
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, an em dash 『—』 is used to introduce explanatory content. Therefore, in the original sentence, 〈,〉 needs to be changed to 『—』 to highlight the logical relationship between the parts of the sentence structure.

error_sentence: There are even some TV dramas, movies base on the book.
correct_sentence: There are even some TV dramas and movies based on the book.
error: , movies base
correction: and movies based
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English expression habits, parallel structures need to be connected with 『and』. In the original sentence, 〈some TV dramas〉 and 〈movies〉 are parallel structures, so 〈,〉 needs to be changed to 『and』 to comply with English expression habits; ② Verb Voice Error: According to the context, this means 'based on the book' and should use the passive voice. The original sentence 〈base〉 is in the active voice, so 〈base〉 needs to be changed to 『based』 to fit the context.