Writing prompt: We Are What We Read

Student essay:
Since the app "We chat"has come into our life,it seems that we all depend more and more on it.No matter when it is, we all can see our friends stick their photos on the "Friends' circle".As a result, people are becoming the Wechataholic.
To judge the app is good or not, in my viewpoint, is really a complicated problem. First of all,it saves money of talking on phone. For we can use our mic to say what we want instead of it. Secondly, it shows a variety of peole's life and minds, we can share our thought after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with your friends, which you used to talk about it face to face.
On the other hand,"Wechat" makes us be addicted with it. Since you can see people lower their head watching people's life almost everywhere. Not only is it dangerous to cross the road when you don't concentrate on the light but also it drags you far from the reality. A news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their head using Wechat, which annoyed the old and let them end the party. You see, Wechat reduce some energy in the real life.
In my way,we should use Wechat properly. The more important thing is how we chat, but not what we chat.

Corrected essay:
Since the app "WeChat" has come into our life, it seems that we all depend more and more on it. No matter when it is, we can always see our friends stick their photos on the "WeChat Moments". As a result, people are becoming WeChataholics.
To judge whether the app is good or not, in my viewpoint, is really a complicated problem. First of all, it saves money on talking on the phone. Because we can use our mic to say what we want instead. Secondly, it shows a variety of people's lives and minds. We can share our thoughts after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with our friends, which we used to talk about face to face.
On the other hand, "WeChat" makes us addicted to it. You can see people lower their heads watching others' lives almost everywhere. Not only is it dangerous to cross the road when you don't concentrate on the light, but it also drags you far from reality. A piece of news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their heads using WeChat, which annoyed the elders and let them end the party. You see, WeChat reduces some energy in real life.
In my view, we should use WeChat properly. The more important thing is how we chat, not what we chat.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Since the app "We chat"has come into our life,it seems that we all depend more and more on it.
correct_sentence: Since the app "WeChat" has come into our life, it seems that we all depend more and more on it.
error: We chat"has
correction: WeChat" has
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: The app name 〈We chat〉 must be capitalized to comply with brand guidelines, so 〈We chat〉 needs to be changed to 『WeChat』 to maintain correct spelling of the proper noun; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space must be kept between the verb 〈has〉 and the closing quotation mark, so a space needs to be added before 〈has〉 to ensure correct formatting.

error_sentence: No matter when it is, we all can see our friends stick their photos on the "Friends' circle".
correct_sentence: No matter when it is, we can always see our friends stick their photos on the "WeChat Moments".
error: all can
correction: can always
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adverb Error: The use of the adverb 〈all〉 is inappropriate; according to the sentence's meaning, 『can always』 better expresses frequency and scope, so 〈all can〉 needs to be changed to 『can always』 to make the meaning more accurate.

error_sentence: No matter when it is, we all can see our friends stick their photos on the "Friends' circle".
correct_sentence: No matter when it is, we can always see our friends stick their photos on the "WeChat Moments".
error: Friends' circle"
correction: WeChat Moments"
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: The standard English translation for "微信朋友圈" is 『WeChat Moments』; the original expression 〈Friends' circle〉 is an error in terminology and needs to be corrected to the official term 『WeChat Moments』.

error_sentence: As a result, people are becoming the Wechataholic.

correct_sentence: As a result, people are becoming WeChataholics.

error: the Wechataholic
correction: WeChataholics
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English article usage rules, the proper noun 〈Wechataholic〉 should not be preceded by the definite article 'the'; therefore, the redundant determiner 'the' needs to be deleted to conform to grammatical norms; ② Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈Wechataholic〉, as a countable noun, should be in its plural form when referring to a general group, so it needs to be changed to 『WeChataholics』 to maintain number agreement; ③ Case Error: According to English compound word writing conventions, 〈Wechataholic〉, as a proper compound noun, needs to maintain initial capitalization, so it should be corrected to 『WeChataholics』.

error_sentence: To judge the app is good or not, in my viewpoint, is really a complicated problem.
correct_sentence: To judge whether the app is good or not, in my viewpoint, is really a complicated problem.
correction: whether
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English clause grammar rules, when the verb 〈judge〉 is followed by an object clause, it needs to be introduced by the conjunction 『whether』; the original sentence lacks the necessary conjunction, leading to an incomplete structure, so 『whether』 needs to be added to ensure grammatical correctness.

error_sentence: First of all,it saves money of talking on phone.
correct_sentence: First of all, it saves money on talking on the phone.
error: of
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, the preposition 『on』 must be used in 〈save money of talking on phone.〉; the original sentence's use of 〈of〉 does not conform to idiomatic usage, so 〈of〉 needs to be changed to 『on』.

error_sentence: First of all,it saves money of talking on phone.
correct_sentence: First of all, it saves money on talking on the phone.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English article usage rules, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added before the noun 〈phone〉 to indicate the specific action of "making a phone call", so 『the』 needs to be added to ensure semantic accuracy.

error_sentence: For we can use our mic to say what we want instead of it.
correct_sentence: Because we can use our mic to say what we want instead.
error: For
correction: Because
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English formal writing conventions, 〈For〉 as a conjunction cannot be used at the beginning of a sentence to express cause; it needs to be changed to the more formal 『Because』 to fit the causal logical expression of the context, so the choice of conjunction needs to be adjusted.

error_sentence: For we can use our mic to say what we want instead of it.
correct_sentence: Because we can use our mic to say what we want instead.
error: of it
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the principle of conciseness in English expression, the component 〈of it〉 in 〈instead of it〉 is redundant, as the preceding 〈what we want〉 has already clarified the object of substitution; therefore, deleting the redundant part makes the expression more concise, and changing it to 『instead』 is sufficient.

error_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of peole's life and minds, we can share our thought after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with your friends, which you used to talk about it face to face.

correct_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of people's lives and minds.
error: peole's life
correction: people's lives
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: A spelling error was detected in 〈peole〉; according to basic English vocabulary spelling rules, the correct form should be 『people』, meaning "people", and this spelling error needs to be corrected; ② Noun Number Error: 〈life〉, as a countable noun, needs to express multiple different states of life in this context; according to English noun singular/plural usage rules, it should be changed to the plural form 『lives』 to accurately express the meaning.

error_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of peole's life and minds, we can share our thought after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with your friends, which you used to talk about it face to face.

correct_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of people's lives and minds. We can share our thoughts after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with our friends, which we used to talk about face to face.

error: , we
correction: . We
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation usage norms, it was detected that two complete independent clauses 〈shows...minds〉 and 〈we can share...〉 were incorrectly connected by a comma; it should be changed to a period to separate them, making the sentence structure conform to grammatical requirements; ② Case Error: The word 〈we〉 at the beginning of the sentence was not capitalized; according to basic English writing conventions, the first letter of a sentence must be capitalized, so it needs to be corrected to 『We』.

error_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of peole's life and minds, we can share our thought after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with your friends, which you used to talk about it face to face.

correct_sentence: We can share our thoughts after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with our friends, which we used to talk about face to face.

error: thought
correction: thoughts
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈thought〉, as a countable noun, needs to express multiple ideas in this sentence; according to English noun plural rules, the plural form 『thoughts』 should be used to conform to the diversity described in the context.

error_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of peole's life and minds, we can share our thought after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with your friends, which you used to talk about it face to face.

correct_sentence: We can share our thoughts after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with our friends, which we used to talk about face to face.

error: your
correction: our
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The preceding subject is 〈we〉, but the subsequent use of the possessive 〈your〉 causes referential confusion; according to the principle of pronoun consistency in English, it should be uniformly changed to 『our』 to maintain a clear referential relationship.

error_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of peole's life and minds, we can share our thought after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with your friends, which you used to talk about it face to face.

correct_sentence: We can share our thoughts after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with our friends, which we used to talk about face to face.

error: you
correction: we
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: It was detected that the subject 〈you〉 in the relative clause is inconsistent with the main clause subject 〈we〉; according to English relative clause subject consistency requirements, it should be uniformly changed to 『we』 to ensure unified reference and logical coherence.

error_sentence: Secondly, it shows a variety of peole's life and minds, we can share our thought after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with your friends, which you used to talk about it face to face.

correct_sentence: We can share our thoughts after reading a book or enjoy a beautiful scene with our friends, which we used to talk about face to face.

error: it
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the principle of conciseness in English expression, 〈it〉 in 〈talk about it〉 constitutes a redundant reference with the relative pronoun 〈which〉; deleting 〈it〉 avoids redundancy, and changing it to 『talk about』 is sufficient to maintain the completeness of the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: On the other hand,"Wechat" makes us be addicted with it.
correct_sentence: On the other hand, "WeChat" makes us addicted to it.
error: hand,"Wechat
correction: hand, "WeChat
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English punctuation usage norms, a missing space after the comma was detected; a space should be added after the punctuation mark, correcting 〈hand,"WeChat〉 to 『hand, "WeChat』; ② Case Error: The brand name 〈Wechat〉 did not follow proper noun capitalization rules; according to the app's official naming conventions, it should be uniformly changed to 『WeChat』.

error_sentence: On the other hand,"Wechat" makes us be addicted with it.
correct_sentence: On the other hand, "WeChat" makes us addicted to it.
error: be addicted with
correction: addicted to
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: The usage of 'make' here is as a causative verb, with the structure: "make + object + adjective (no 'be' verb needed)", so 〈be〉 needs to be deleted; ② Preposition Error: The collocation 〈addicted with〉 was detected as incorrect; according to English fixed phrase usage, the expression for addiction must use the structure 『addicted to』, so the preposition 〈with〉 needs to be changed to 『to』.

error_sentence: Since you can see people lower their head watching people's life almost everywhere.
correct_sentence: You can see people lower their heads watching others' lives almost everywhere.
error: Since you
correction: You
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: Analysis of the context reveals a logical contradiction between the adverbial clause of reason introduced by 〈Since〉 and the main clause; according to semantic coherence requirements, directly using the main clause 『You can see...』 more accurately expresses the intent.

error_sentence: Since you can see people lower their head watching people's life almost everywhere.
correct_sentence: You can see people lower their heads watching others' lives almost everywhere.
error: head watching people's life
correction: heads watching others' lives
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the principle of agreement in number with the plural subject 〈people〉, the countable noun 〈head〉 should be changed to the plural form 『heads』. Similarly, the noun 〈life〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『lives』 to describe the diversity of lives; ② Noun Error: 〈people's life〉 does not conform to idiomatic English expression; according to native English speaker usage, a more idiomatic expression for "others' lives" should be 『others' lives』.

error_sentence: Not only is it dangerous to cross the road when you don't concentrate on the light but also it drags you far from the reality.
correct_sentence: Not only is it dangerous to cross the road when you don't concentrate on the light, but it also drags you far from reality.
error: but also it
correction: , but it also
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to the structural norms for sentences connected by English conjunctions, a comma 『, 』 needs to be added before 〈but also〉 to make the sentence structure clearer and conform to writing conventions; ② Word Order Error: According to the 〈not only...but also〉 parallel structure, the word order in 〈but also it〉 was detected as improper; according to English coordinating conjunction usage norms, it should be adjusted to 『but it also』 to ensure correct word order.

error_sentence: Not only is it dangerous to cross the road when you don't concentrate on the light but also it drags you far from the reality.
correct_sentence: Not only is it dangerous to cross the road when you don't concentrate on the light, but it also drags you far from reality.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The abstract noun 〈reality〉, when used in a general sense, does not require an article; according to English article usage rules, deleting the superfluous 『the』 makes the expression conform better to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: A news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their head using Wechat, which annoyed the old and let them end the party.
correct_sentence: A piece of news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their heads using WeChat, which annoyed the elders and let them end the party.
correction: piece of
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English uncountable noun usage rules, 〈news〉, as an uncountable noun, needs to be modified by a quantifier such as 『a piece of』; the original sentence lacks the necessary determiner, so it needs to be supplemented as 『a piece of news』 to ensure grammatical correctness.

error_sentence: A news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their head using Wechat, which annoyed the old and let them end the party.
correct_sentence: A piece of news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their heads using WeChat, which annoyed the elders and let them end the party.
error: head using Wechat
correction: heads using WeChat
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: 〈head〉, as a countable noun, needs to represent multiple heads in the context; according to noun singular/plural rules, it should be changed to the plural form 『heads』 to maintain number agreement; ② Case Error: The brand name 〈Wechat〉 did not follow proper noun capitalization rules; according to the app's official naming conventions, it should be uniformly changed to 『WeChat』.

error_sentence: A news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their head using Wechat, which annoyed the old and let them end the party.
correct_sentence: A piece of news has been reported that some young men and their older relatives were having a party while the young men all lowered their heads using WeChat, which annoyed the elders and let them end the party.
error: old
correction: elders
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Noun Error: 〈old〉, as an adjective, cannot directly refer to elders; according to idiomatic English expression, it should be changed to the noun 『elders』 to accurately represent the group "elders".

error_sentence: You see, Wechat reduce some energy in the real life.

correct_sentence: You see, WeChat reduces some energy in real life.

error: Wechat reduce
correction: WeChat reduces
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Case Error: 〈Wechat〉 was again detected as not capitalized; according to brand name writing conventions, it should be uniformly corrected to 『WeChat』; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: When the subject is singular, the verb 〈reduce〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『reduces』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: You see, Wechat reduce some energy in the real life.

correct_sentence: You see, WeChat reduces some energy in real life.

error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The abstract noun phrase 〈real life〉, when used in a general sense, does not require an article; according to English article usage rules, the superfluous 『the』 should be deleted, and using 『real life』 directly is more in line with grammatical norms.

error_sentence: In my way,we should use Wechat properly.
correct_sentence: In my view, we should use WeChat properly.
error: way
correction: view
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to English expression norms, the fixed expression 〈in my view〉 must use the noun 『view』; the original word 〈way〉 is an error in word choice and should be corrected to 『in my view』 to ensure idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: In my way,we should use Wechat properly.
correct_sentence: In my view, we should use WeChat properly.
error: Wechat
correction: WeChat
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: 〈Wechat〉 was again detected as not capitalized; according to brand name writing conventions, it should be uniformly corrected to 『WeChat』.

error_sentence: The more important thing is how we chat, but not what we chat.
correct_sentence: The more important thing is how we chat, not what we chat.
error: but
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression habits, the comparative structure 〈the more...not〉 already implies a contrastive relationship; adding the conjunction 『but』 causes redundancy. Deleting it makes the sentence more concise and fluent; it should be modified to the 〈the more...not〉 structure.