Writing prompt: A Review of Frankenstein

Student essay:
Last week, our class saw a movie called Frankenstein. It is very interesting.
It's an American movie directed by Steph Lady. The movie starred Helena Bonham Carter, Kenneth Branagh and Aidan Quinn.The film tells the story about a young chemist created a large and ugly monster, because it's very ugly, the monster isn't accepted by people.Then,the monster started to get Frankenstein,and killed all his families and loved ones.
Frankenstein very popular.It has brought millions of dollars,although the film crew had died,the monster is still active on the screen.
In general, this is a very interesting movie to watch.

Corrected essay:
Last week, our class saw a movie called Frankenstein. It is very interesting.
It's an American movie directed by Steph Lady. The movie starred Helena Bonham Carter, Kenneth Branagh and Aidan Quinn. The film tells the story of a young chemist who created a large and ugly monster. Because it was very ugly, the monster wasn't accepted by people. Then, the monster started to get revenge on Frankenstein, and killed all his family and loved ones.
Frankenstein was very popular. It brought in millions of dollars. Although the film crew has died, the monster is still active on the screen.
In general, this is a very interesting movie to watch.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The film tells the story about a young chemist created a large and ugly monster, because it's very ugly, the monster isn't accepted by people.
correct_sentence: The film tells the story of a young chemist who created a large and ugly monster.
error: about
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, when 'tell the story' is followed by content about the main subject of the story, the common fixed phrase is 'tell the story of'. The use of 〈about〉 in the original sentence does not conform to this fixed phrase convention. Change 〈about〉 to 『of』 to make the sentence conform to the standard expression 'tell the story of', accurately conveying the meaning of 'telling the story of...'. 

error_sentence: The film tells the story about a young chemist created a large and ugly monster, because it's very ugly, the monster isn't accepted by people.
correct_sentence: The film tells the story of a young chemist who created a large and ugly monster.
correction: who
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Relative Word Error: In the original sentence, 'a young chemist created a large and ugly monster' is an attributive clause modifying 'a young chemist', but it lacks a relative pronoun. In English attributive clauses, when the antecedent serves as the subject in the clause, a relative pronoun is needed to introduce it. Here, the antecedent 'a young chemist' is the subject; adding the relative pronoun 〈who〉 forms 'a young chemist who created a large and ugly monster', making the attributive clause structure complete and grammatically correct.

error_sentence: The film tells the story about a young chemist created a large and ugly monster, because it's very ugly, the monster isn't accepted by people.
correct_sentence: The film tells the story of a young chemist who created a large and ugly monster. Because it was very ugly, the monster wasn't accepted by people.
error: , because it's
correction: . Because it was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent clauses cannot be connected by only a comma. In the original sentence, 'The film tells the story about a young chemist created a large and ugly monster' and 'because it's very ugly, the monster isn't accepted by people' are two independent sentences connected only by a comma, which is not standard. The comma 〈,〉 should be changed to a period 〈.〉, and 'because it's' should start a new sentence, modified to 'Because it was', to make the sentence structure correct; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the entire sentence is narrating past events and should use the past tense. In the original sentence, 〈it's〉 is in the present simple tense, which is inconsistent with the overall past tense. Change 〈it's〉 to 『it was』 to maintain tense consistency throughout the text and conform to grammatical rules. 

error_sentence: The film tells the story about a young chemist created a large and ugly monster, because it's very ugly, the monster isn't accepted by people.
correct_sentence: Because it was very ugly, the monster wasn't accepted by people.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the overall context of the sentence, it is narrating past events and should use the past tense. In the original sentence, 〈isn't〉 is in the present simple tense, which is inconsistent with the past tense narration of the context. Change 〈isn't〉 to the past form 『wasn't』 to maintain tense consistency in the sentence, conforming to grammatical rules and semantic logic. 

error_sentence: Then,the monster started to get Frankenstein,and killed all his families and loved ones.

correct_sentence: Then, the monster started to get revenge on Frankenstein, and killed all his family and loved ones.

correction: revenge on
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Noun Error: The verb 〈get〉 itself cannot convey the meaning of revenge; the noun 『revenge』 needs to be added to form the verb phrase 『get revenge』 to clarify the meaning; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, when 'get revenge' means 'to take revenge', it needs to be paired with the preposition 〈on〉 to introduce the object of revenge. In the original sentence, 'get Frankenstein' is unclear in meaning; adding 『revenge on』 before 〈Frankenstein〉 forms 'get revenge on Frankenstein', clearly expressing the meaning of 'taking revenge on Frankenstein', conforming to English expression habits.

error_sentence: Then,the monster started to get Frankenstein,and killed all his families and loved ones.

correct_sentence: Then, the monster started to get revenge on Frankenstein, and killed all his family and loved ones.

error: families
correction: family
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: In English, 〈families〉 is the plural form of 'family', meaning multiple families. However, in this context, it refers to Frankenstein's single family, not multiple families. Therefore, the plural form 〈families〉 should be changed to the singular form 『family』 to make the sentence accurately express the meaning and conform to grammatical rules. 

error_sentence: Frankenstein very popular.
correct_sentence: Frankenstein was very popular.
correction: was
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Auxiliary Error: The original sentence 'Frankenstein very popular.' lacks a predicate verb and cannot form a complete sentence structure. In English, describing a past state requires the past tense. After adding 〈was〉, it forms 'Frankenstein was very popular.', creating a subject-copula-predicate structure, clearly expressing 'Frankenstein was very popular in the past', making the sentence structure complete and the tense correct, conforming to grammatical rules. 

error_sentence: It has brought millions of dollars,although the film crew had died,the monster is still active on the screen.

correct_sentence: It brought in millions of dollars.
error: has brought
correction: brought in
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: In the original sentence, 'has brought' is in the present perfect tense, while the event of the movie making a profit happened in the past. According to the context, the simple past tense should be used; change 〈has brought〉 to 『brought』 to make the sentence tense logical; ② Preposition Error: According to English fixed phrases and expression habits, 'bring in' is a fixed phrase meaning 'to earn (income)'. Using 'bring' alone cannot accurately express the meaning of 'bringing in income'; add 『in』 after 〈brought〉 to form 'brought in', conforming to English expression habits and accurately conveying the meaning of the movie earning income. 

error_sentence: It has brought millions of dollars,although the film crew had died,the monster is still active on the screen.

correct_sentence: It brought in millions of dollars. Although the film crew has died, the monster is still active on the screen.

error: ,although
correction: . Although
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: In English grammar, a comma cannot directly connect two independent clauses. In the original sentence, 'It has brought in millions of dollars' and 'although the film crew has died, the monster is still active on the screen' are two independent sentences connected by a comma, which is not standard. Change the comma 〈,〉 to a period 『.』 to make the sentence structure correct and form a standard compound sentence structure; ② Space Error: According to English written expression norms, a space of one letter must be maintained between a punctuation mark (comma or period) and the following word, so a space needs to be added and changed to 『. Although』; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence must be capitalized. After correcting the punctuation, 'although' is at the beginning of the sentence, so its first letter should be capitalized; therefore, change 〈although〉 to 『Although』, conforming to English writing habits and making the sentence writing standard. 

error_sentence: It has brought millions of dollars,although the film crew had died,the monster is still active on the screen.

correct_sentence: Although the film crew has died, the monster is still active on the screen.

error: had
correction: has
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: In the context of this sentence, describing the impact of the film crew's death on the present, the present perfect tense should be used. In the original sentence, 'had died' is in the past perfect tense; the past perfect tense is used to indicate 'the past of the past'. 〈had〉 should be changed to 『has』 to make the sentence tense correct, conforming to the need to express the current fact that 'the film crew has died'.