Writing prompt: My Dreaming Destination in Europe

Student essay:
My dreaming destination in Europe is Switzerland.Let me explain my choice and express my real thoughts on it.
Switzerland is a developed country which is situated in the middle of Europe and next to Austria,France,Italian and German.Besides it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with an large population of 7.5 million.
It's generally agreed that Berne,the capital of Switzerland,plays an important part in terms of politics and economy.And Geneva is known to all the world as a bustling and crowded city as well.
What's more,Switzerland actually has a number of rarely tourism resources and its natural sightseeing is indeed beautiful and unforgettable.As a result,it is considered the garden of the world.This is the point that most attracts me.
As far as I know Switzerland's watch,chemistry as well as food industry are also very popular and developed.
My description may have a brief impression on you,if you acquire more details just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.

Corrected essay:
My dream destination in Europe is Switzerland. Let me explain my choice and express my real thoughts on it.
Switzerland is a developed country which is situated in the middle of Europe and next to Austria, France, Italy and Germany. Besides, it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with a large population of 7.5 million.
It's generally agreed that Berne, the capital of Switzerland, plays an important part in terms of politics and economy. And Geneva is known to all the world as a bustling and crowded city as well.
What's more, Switzerland actually has a number of tourism resources and its natural sightseeing is indeed beautiful and unforgettable. As a result, it is considered the garden of the world. This is the point that most attracts me.
As far as I know, Switzerland's watch, chemical as well as food industries are also very popular and developed.
My description may leave a brief impression on you. If you acquire more details, just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My dreaming destination in Europe is Switzerland.
correct_sentence: My dream destination in Europe is Switzerland.
error: dreaming
correction: dream
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈dreaming〉 is the present participle form of a verb, while a noun is needed here as an attributive to modify 〈destination〉. It should be changed to the noun 『dream』 to form the fixed phrase 『dream destination』, to accurately express the meaning of 'dream destination'.

error_sentence: Switzerland is a developed country which is situated in the middle of Europe and next to Austria,France,Italian and German.
correct_sentence: Switzerland is a developed country which is situated in the middle of Europe and next to Austria, France, Italy and Germany.
error: Italian and German
correction: Italy and Germany
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to geographical expression norms, 〈Italian〉 and 〈German〉 are adjectives or language names, whereas country names are needed here as objects of the preposition 〈next to〉. They should be changed to the country nouns 『Italy』 and 『Germany』 to meet semantic requirements.

error_sentence: Besides it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with an large population of 7.5 million.

correct_sentence: Besides, it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with a large population of 7.5 million.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules, when the adverb 〈Besides〉 is at the beginning of a sentence introducing an independent clause, a comma is needed to separate the adverbial phrase from the main clause. A 『,』 should be added after 〈Besides〉 to ensure the clarity of the sentence structure.

error_sentence: Besides it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with an large population of 7.5 million.

correct_sentence: Besides, it is a peaceful and convenient country covering an area of 41 thousand square kilometers with a large population of 7.5 million.

error: an
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English article rules, 〈an〉 is used before words beginning with a vowel sound, while 〈large〉 begins with the consonant sound /l/. It should be changed to 『a』 to ensure the correct pairing of the article with the noun.

error_sentence: What's more,Switzerland actually has a number of rarely tourism resources and its natural sightseeing is indeed beautiful and unforgettable.
correct_sentence: What's more, Switzerland actually has a number of tourism resources and its natural sightseeing is indeed beautiful and unforgettable.
error: rarely
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to the sentence meaning, the adverb 〈rarely〉 means 'seldom', which contradicts the contextual semantics. After deleting this word, 〈tourism resources〉 can more accurately express the core meaning of 'tourism resources'.

error_sentence: As far as I know Switzerland's watch,chemistry as well as food industry are also very popular and developed.

correct_sentence: As far as I know, Switzerland's watch, chemical as well as food industries are also very popular and developed.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation norms, the phrase 〈As far as I know〉, when used as an interjection, needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma. A 『,』 should be added after 〈know〉 to ensure the completeness of the sentence structure.

error_sentence: As far as I know Switzerland's watch,chemistry as well as food industry are also very popular and developed.

correct_sentence: As far as I know, Switzerland's watch, chemical as well as food industries are also very popular and developed.

error: chemistry
correction: chemical
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to fixed collocation rules, 〈chemistry〉 refers to the 'discipline of chemistry', while an adjective is needed here to modify 〈industry〉. It should be changed to 『chemical』 to form the fixed phrase 『chemical industry』 to accurately express 'chemical industry'.

error_sentence: As far as I know Switzerland's watch,chemistry as well as food industry are also very popular and developed.

correct_sentence: As far as I know, Switzerland's watch, chemical as well as food industries are also very popular and developed.

error: industry
correction: industries
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the principle of consistency in parallel structures, 〈watch, chemical as well as food〉 includes multiple industries, requiring the plural form to represent the overall category. It should be changed to 『industries』 to maintain number agreement.

error_sentence: My description may have a brief impression on you,if you acquire more details just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.
correct_sentence: My description may leave a brief impression on you.
error: have
correction: leave
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, the verb 〈have〉 when paired with 〈impression〉 results in incomplete semantics. It should be changed to 『leave an impression』 to accurately express the meaning 'to leave an impression'.

error_sentence: My description may have a brief impression on you,if you acquire more details just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.
correct_sentence: My description may leave a brief impression on you. If you acquire more details, just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.
error: ,if
correction: . If
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English sentence structure rules, connecting two independent clauses with a comma leads to a comma splice error. The comma should be changed to a period 『.』, and the conjunction 『If』 should be used to introduce a conditional adverbial clause to correctly separate the sentences; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of the first word in a sentence must be capitalized, so 〈if〉 should be changed to 『If』 to ensure the correct format at the beginning of the sentence.

error_sentence: My description may have a brief impression on you,if you acquire more details just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.
correct_sentence: If you acquire more details, just go off and enjoy Switzerland yourself.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English adverbial clause punctuation rules, when the conditional adverbial clause 〈if you acquire more details〉 precedes the main clause, it must be separated from the main clause by a comma. A 『,』 should be added after 〈details〉 to ensure the normative nature of the sentence structure.