Writing prompt: The Advantages and Disadvantages of Private Cars

Student essay:
Nowadays with the development of science and technology.Cars become increasingly popular.The cars are so convenient that they improve our efficiency. We can go to the place far away from home to have a travel. Besides we can go on business more fast.But cars are also have many shortcoming.
The waste-gas from cars not only pollutes the air but also speedster up the climate change. Too many cars cause more and more crowded. The crowded traffic has a bad influence on our trip.
As far as Im concerned,the invention of cars is good for the progress of human. They plays an important part in our daily life.I do hope that people can take advantage of cars.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays with the development of science and technology, cars have become increasingly popular. Cars are so convenient that they improve our efficiency. We can go to the place far away from home to have a travel. Besides we can go on business faster. But cars also have many shortcomings.
The waste-gas from cars not only pollutes the air but also speeds up the climate change. Too many cars cause more and more crowding. The crowded traffic has a bad influence on our trips.
As far as I'm concerned, the invention of cars is good for the progress of humanity. They play an important part in our daily life. I do hope that people can take advantage of cars.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Nowadays with the development of science and technology. Cars become increasingly popular.
correct_sentence: Nowadays with the development of science and technology, cars have become increasingly popular.
error: .Cars
correction: , cars have
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent clauses should be connected by a comma, not a period; in the original sentence, 〈with the development of science and technology〉 and 〈Cars become increasingly popular〉 are two clauses, so 〈.Cars〉 is changed to 『, cars』 to comply with grammar; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the context, this action should use the present perfect tense, while in the original sentence 〈become〉 is in the simple present tense, so 〈become〉 needs to be changed to the present perfect tense 『have become』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: The cars are so convenient that they improve our efficiency.
correct_sentence: Cars are so convenient that they improve our efficiency.
error: The cars
correction: Cars
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the plural noun 〈cars〉 cannot be modified by the article 〈the〉, so 〈the〉 needs to be deleted to comply with English grammar.

error_sentence: Besides we can go on business more fast.
correct_sentence: Besides we can go on business faster.
error: more fast
correction: faster
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adjective Error: According to English grammar rules, the comparative form of the adjective in the original sentence is incorrect; 〈more fast〉 does not follow the rule for single-syllable adjective comparatives, so 〈more fast〉 needs to be changed to 『faster』 to correctly express the comparison.

error_sentence: But cars are also have many shortcoming.

correct_sentence: But cars also have many shortcomings.

error: are
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence 〈are also have〉 has a redundant linking verb; the be-verb appearing alone means "is", so 〈are〉 should be deleted and changed to 『cars also have』 to comply with English grammar.

error_sentence: But cars are also have many shortcoming.

correct_sentence: But cars also have many shortcomings.

error: shortcoming
correction: shortcomings
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈shortcoming〉 in the original sentence should use the plural form 『shortcomings』 to indicate multiple disadvantages, so 〈shortcoming〉 should be changed to 『shortcomings』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: The waste-gas from cars not only pollutes the air but also speedster up the climate change.
correct_sentence: The waste-gas from cars not only pollutes the air but also speeds up the climate change.
error: speedster
correction: speeds
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express "accelerate", so 〈speedster〉 is a misspelling of 『speeds』; 〈speedster〉 needs to be changed to 『speeds』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: Too many cars cause more and more crowded.
correct_sentence: Too many cars cause more and more crowding.
error: crowded
correction: crowding
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈crowded〉 is an adjective, but a noun is needed here as the object, so 〈crowded〉 needs to be changed to the gerund 『crowding』 to represent "the phenomenon of congestion" to fit the context.

error_sentence: The crowded traffic has a bad influence on our trip.

correct_sentence: The crowded traffic has a bad influence on our trips.

error: trip
correction: trips
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈trip〉 in the original sentence should use the plural form 『trips』 to indicate the impact on multiple journeys, so 〈trip〉 should be changed to 『trips』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: As far as Im concerned,the invention of cars is good for the progress of human.
correct_sentence: As far as I'm concerned, the invention of cars is good for the progress of humanity.
error: m
correction: 'm
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Contraction Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈Im〉 needs an apostrophe to indicate a contraction, so 〈Im〉 is changed to 『I'm』 to comply with contraction rules.

error_sentence: As far as Im concerned,the invention of cars is good for the progress of human.
correct_sentence: As far as I'm concerned, the invention of cars is good for the progress of humanity.
error: human
correction: humanity
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the context, the sentence meaning here is "mankind"; 〈human〉 refers to an individual human being, which does not fit the context, so 〈human〉 needs to be changed to 『humanity』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: They plays an important part in our daily life.
correct_sentence: They play an important part in our daily life.
error: plays
correction: play
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈They〉 is plural, and the verb 〈plays〉 in the original sentence is in the singular form, so the verb 〈plays〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『play』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.