Writing prompt: The Different Attitudes Boarders

Student essay:
Nowdays,ninety percentage of students are only child in the home. And because of the distance from the school are very far,or many parents are very busy.So,many students live in school.Therefore,there have some different attitudes about only child live in school.
Some people are support of it.In their attitudes,they think this can solve many problems and save many times.Their children also can achieve great protection from school.Learning environment can be improved,so the child's grades can be improved too.
However, other people don't think so.They think these children loss the control of their parents,and have too much freedom.They may be become more bad and do not listen to the teacher and parents.
As far as I can see,nowdays children most are only child.When they live in home,they can not achieve great help with busy parents.But when they live in school,they have many friends ,classmates and teachers.They can ask for help to them.They also can get great control by teachers.So,it is for them to live in the school.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays, ninety percent of students are the only child in their home. And because the distance from the school is very far, or many parents are very busy, many students live in school. Therefore, there are some different attitudes about the only child living in school.
Some people support it. In their opinion, they think this can solve many problems and save much time. Their children also can achieve great protection from school. The learning environment can be improved, so the child's grades can be improved too.
However, other people don't think so. They think these children are out of the control of their parents, and have too much freedom. They may become worse and not listen to the teacher and parents.
As far as I can see, nowadays most children are the only child. When they live at home, they can not get great help from busy parents. But when they live in school, they have many friends, classmates and teachers. They can ask for help from them. They are also under great control of teachers. So, it is better for them to live in the school.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Nowdays,ninety percentage of students are only child in the home.
correct_sentence: Nowadays, ninety percent of students are the only child in their home.
error: Nowdays
correction: Nowadays
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English adverb spelling rules, 〈Nowdays〉 is misspelled; the correct spelling should be 『Nowadays』 (note the second syllable -day- containing the letter a), indicating the concept of 'present time'.

error_sentence: Nowdays,ninety percentage of students are only child in the home.
correct_sentence: Nowadays, ninety percent of students are the only child in their home.
error: percentage
correction: percent
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to English percentage expression norms, when expressing specific values, 『percent』 should be used instead of 〈percentage〉. Therefore, 〈percentage〉 is changed to 『percent』, forming the correct expression 『ninety percent』 (90%), while 〈percentage〉 is only used for general proportional concepts.

error_sentence: Nowdays,ninety percentage of students are only child in the home.
correct_sentence: Nowadays, ninety percent of students are the only child in their home.
error: only child in the
correction: the only child in their
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English specific reference rules, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added before 『only』 to indicate specific reference 『the only』; at the same time, 〈the home〉 is changed to 『their home』 to clarify the possessive relationship, making the meaning clearer.

error_sentence: And because of the distance from the school are very far,or many parents are very busy.
correct_sentence: And because the distance from the school is very far, or many parents are very busy, many students live in school.
error: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English clause connection rules, 〈because of〉 is followed by a noun phrase, whereas a clause needs to be connected here; therefore, the preposition 『of』 is deleted, and the conjunction 〈because〉 is used to directly introduce the adverbial clause of reason.

error_sentence: And because of the distance from the school are very far,or many parents are very busy.
correct_sentence: And because the distance from the school is very far, or many parents are very busy, many students live in school.
error: are
correction: is
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the subject 〈distance〉 is a singular noun, so the predicate verb needs to be in the singular form 『is』 instead of the plural form 〈are〉 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: And because of the distance from the school are very far,or many parents are very busy. So,many students live in school.
correct_sentence: And because the distance from the school is very far, or many parents are very busy, many students live in school.
error: .So
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English compound sentence punctuation rules, a comma should be used between two independent clauses connected by a comma, not a period; therefore, 〈.So〉 is changed to 『, so』, using a comma to maintain sentence coherence; ② Conjunction Error: According to English causal logic expression norms, since 〈because〉 has already been used to state the reason in the preceding text, the subsequent result does not need to be introduced by 〈So〉; therefore, 〈So〉 is deleted and a comma is used directly for connection to avoid redundancy.

error_sentence: Therefore,there have some different attitudes about only child live in school.

correct_sentence: Therefore, there are some different attitudes about the only child living in school.

error: have
correction: are
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English existential sentence structure rules, 〈there have〉 does not conform to idiomatic expression and should be changed to 『there are』 to indicate existence, conforming to the standard 'There be' sentence pattern.

error_sentence: Therefore,there have some different attitudes about only child live in school.

correct_sentence: Therefore, there are some different attitudes about the only child living in school.

correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English specific reference rules, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added before 『only』 to indicate specific reference 『the only』 to comply with English article rules.

error_sentence: Therefore,there have some different attitudes about only child live in school.

correct_sentence: Therefore, there are some different attitudes about the only child living in school.

error: live
correction: living
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English participle modification rules, the verb 〈live〉 needs to be changed to the present participle 『living』 to act as an adjective modifying 〈child〉, forming the correct expression 『child living in school』.

error_sentence: Some people are support of it.
correct_sentence: Some people support it.
error: are support of
correction: support
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English predicate verb usage norms, 〈are support of〉 has a redundant structure; 〈are〉 and 〈of〉 are deleted, and the verb 『support』 is used directly as the predicate to make the expression more concise and accurate.

error_sentence: In their attitudes,they think this can solve many problems and save many times.
correct_sentence: In their opinion, they think this can solve many problems and save much time.
error: attitudes
correction: opinion
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, 〈In their attitudes〉 does not conform to idiomatic expression and should be changed to 『In their opinion』 to correctly express the viewpoint 'in their view'.

error_sentence: In their attitudes,they think this can solve many problems and save many times.
correct_sentence: In their opinion, they think this can solve many problems and save much time.
error: many times
correction: much time
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English rules for modifying uncountable nouns, since 〈time〉 is an uncountable noun, its quantifier should be 〈much〉 instead of 〈many〉; therefore, 〈many〉 is changed to 『much』 to form the correct expression 『save much time』, meaning 'save a lot of time'; ② Noun Number Error: According to English noun usage rules, 〈times〉 refers to the specific concept of 'occasions' or 'number of times', whereas here the abstract concept of 'time' needs to be expressed; the uncountable noun 『time』 should be used and paired with much to form the correct expression 『much time』.

error_sentence: Learning environment can be improved,so the child's grades can be improved too.

correct_sentence: The learning environment can be improved, so the child's grades can be improved too.

error: Learning
correction: The learning
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English specific reference expression rules, the noun phrase 〈learning environment〉 needs the definite article 『the』 added to form 『the learning environment』, to specifically refer to the concept of 'this learning environment'.

error_sentence: They think these children loss the control of their parents,and have too much freedom.
correct_sentence: They think these children are out of the control of their parents, and have too much freedom.
error: loss
correction: are out of
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English verb collocation rules, the noun 〈loss〉 is grammatically incorrect here and should be changed to the verb phrase 『are out of』 to form 『are out of control』, accurately expressing the meaning 'lose control'.

error_sentence: They may be become more bad and do not listen to the teacher and parents.

correct_sentence: They may become worse and not listen to the teacher and parents.

error: be become more bad and do
correction: become worse and
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to English verb tense rules, 〈be become〉 has a double verb error; 『be』 should be deleted, retaining 『become』; in the parallel structure 〈and do not listen to〉, the auxiliary verb 『do』 is redundant and should be deleted to keep the structure concise; ② Adjective Error: According to English rules for forming comparative adjectives, 〈more bad〉 does not conform to grammatical norms; the comparative form of 'bad' should be the irregular form 『worse』, meaning 'worse'.

error_sentence: As far as I can see,nowdays children most are only child.
correct_sentence: As far as I can see, nowadays most children are the only child.
error: nowdays children most are only child
correction: nowadays most children are the only child
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English adverb spelling rules, 〈nowdays〉 is misspelled; the correct spelling should be 『nowadays』 (note the second syllable -day- containing the letter a), indicating the concept of 'present time'; ② Word Order Error: According to English adverb placement rules, the adverb of degree 〈most〉 should be placed before the be-verb 〈are〉; therefore, 〈children most are〉 is adjusted to 『most children are』, making the word order conform to basic English sentence structure.

error_sentence: When they live in home,they can not achieve great help with busy parents.
correct_sentence: When they live at home, they can not get great help from busy parents.
error: in
correction: at
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, 〈live in home〉 does not conform to idiomatic expression and should be changed to 『live at home』 (using the preposition 『at』 to indicate the state of being at home), which is the standard way to express 'living at home' in English.

error_sentence: When they live in home,they can not achieve great help with busy parents.
correct_sentence: When they live at home, they can not get great help from busy parents.
error: achieve
correction: get
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English verb-object collocation rules, 〈achieve help〉 is semantically inappropriate (achieve usually takes abstract goals); 『get help』 (obtain help) should be used to accurately express the meaning 'get help'.

error_sentence: When they live in home,they can not achieve great help with busy parents.
correct_sentence: When they live at home, they can not get great help from busy parents.
error: with
correction: from
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English preposition collocation rules, 〈help with〉 indicates the content of the help (e.g., help with homework), whereas here 『help from』 is needed to indicate the source of the help, to express that the help comes from parents.

error_sentence: They can ask for help to them.
correct_sentence: They can ask for help from them.
error: to
correction: from
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English norms for expressing requests for help, 〈ask for help to them〉 does not conform to grammatical rules and should be changed to 『ask for help from them』, using 『from』 to indicate the object of the request, which is the correct way to express 'ask them for help'.

error_sentence: They also can get great control by teachers.
correct_sentence: They are also under great control of teachers.
error: also can get
correction: are also under
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: According to English idiomatic expressions for control relationships, the verb phrase 〈get control by〉 is semantically inaccurate; the verb phrase 『are also under control of』 should be used, where 『are also under』 indicates a 'state of being controlled', to accurately express the meaning 'are also under the control of...'.

error_sentence: They also can get great control by teachers.
correct_sentence: They are also under great control of teachers.
error: by
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English possessive expression rules, 〈control by teachers〉 should be changed to 『control of teachers』, using 『of』 to indicate possession, which is the standard form for expressing 'teachers' control'.

error_sentence: So,it is for them to live in the school.
correct_sentence: So, it is better for them to live in the school.
correction: better
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adjective Error: According to English requirements for comparative structure completeness, the adjective 『better』 (better) must be added after 〈it is〉 to complete the comparative meaning, forming the complete comparative sentence structure 『it is better』, clearly expressing the judgment 'this is better'.