Writing prompt: My Summer Holiday

Student essay:
This summer holiday I went to seaside.And I enjoyed myself.But in my memory,the best thing is swam in the sea.
That is a sunny day,and my parents and I went to seside,I'm so excited that jumped into the sea as soon as I got there.The water was very clear only a bit cold.I flet I was a fish in the sea We played ball games in the sea.Everybody looked very exciting. Suddenly,my father said:"let's have a match ,about who is the fastest!" "okay!" I said.So we started a exciting match.What a pity! My dad was the champion.But we were very happy.
This summer holiday brought me many interesting things .And I was so intoxicated with the spirit of these.

Corrected essay:
This summer holiday I went to the seaside. And I enjoyed myself. But in my memory, the best thing was swimming in the sea.
That was a sunny day, and my parents and I went to the seaside. I was so excited that I jumped into the sea as soon as I got there. The water was very clear, only a bit cold. I felt I was a fish in the sea. We played ball games in the sea. Everybody looked very excited. Suddenly, my father said, "Let's have a match about who is the fastest!" "Okay!" I said. So we started an exciting match. What a pity! My dad was the champion. But we were very happy. This summer holiday brought me many interesting things. And I was so intoxicated with the spirit of these.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: This summer holiday I went to seaside.
correct_sentence: This summer holiday I went to the seaside.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the singular countable noun 〈seaside〉 in the original text requires a definite article to indicate a specific place. Therefore, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added before 〈seaside〉 here to indicate specificity and comply with grammar rules.

error_sentence: But in my memory,the best thing is swam in the sea.

correct_sentence: But in my memory, the best thing was swimming in the sea.

error: is swam
correction: was swimming
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the context, recalling past events requires the past tense, using the simple past tense of the predicate verb. Therefore, 〈is〉 needs to be changed to 『was』 to conform to the contextual tense; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, a be-verb is usually followed by a gerund to form a correct predicative structure. Therefore, the simple past tense verb 『swam』 should be changed to the gerund 『swimming』 to comply with English grammar rules.

error_sentence: That is a sunny day,and my parents and I went to seside,I'm so excited that jumped into the sea as soon as I got there.
correct_sentence: That was a sunny day, and my parents and I went to the seaside.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, recalling past events requires the past tense, using the simple past tense of the predicate verb. Therefore, 〈is〉 needs to be changed to 『was』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: That is a sunny day,and my parents and I went to seside,I'm so excited that jumped into the sea as soon as I got there.
correct_sentence: That was a sunny day, and my parents and I went to the seaside. I was so excited that I jumped into the sea as soon as I got there.
error: seside,I'm
correction: the seaside. I was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the singular countable noun 〈seaside〉 in the original text requires a definite article to indicate a specific place. Therefore, the definite article 『the』 needs to be added before 〈seaside〉 here to indicate specificity and comply with grammar rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'go to the seaside'. The correct spelling for '海边' is 'seaside', so the incorrect spelling 〈seside〉 needs to be changed to 『seaside』 to conform to word spelling norms and the original meaning; ③ Punctuation Error: According to English syntax rules, the clauses 'and my parents and I went to the seaside' and 'I'm so excited that...' contain independent subject-verb structures and belong to two different idea groups, thus needing to be separate sentences, separated by a period. 〈,〉 should be changed to 『.』 to comply with English syntax rules; ④ Space Error: According to English syntax rules, sentences need to be separated by punctuation and a space to avoid run-on sentences. Therefore, a space needs to be added after 〈.〉 and before 〈I〉; ⑤ Verb Tense Error: According to the context, describing past events requires the simple past tense of the predicate verb. Therefore, the simple present tense 〈I'm〉 needs to be changed to the simple past tense 『I was』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: That is a sunny day,and my parents and I went to seside,I'm so excited that jumped into the sea as soon as I got there.
correct_sentence: I was so excited that I jumped into the sea as soon as I got there.
correction: I
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the original sentence meaning and structure, after 〈so excited that〉 is an adverbial clause of result, forming a 'so + adjective + that...' structure, where 'that' is followed by the 'result'. Therefore, the original adverbial clause of result is missing a subject, and the subject 『I』 needs to be added before the predicate verb 〈jumped into〉 to make the sentence structure complete and conform to the original meaning.

error_sentence: The water was very clear only a bit cold.
correct_sentence: The water was very clear, only a bit cold.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English syntax rules, the adverbial phrase 〈only a bit cold〉, serving as supplementary information, needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma to clarify the semantic hierarchy and avoid run-on sentence components. Therefore, a 『,』 needs to be added after 〈clear〉 to comply with English syntax rules.

error_sentence: I flet I was a fish in the sea We played ball games in the sea.
correct_sentence: I felt I was a fish in the sea.
error: flet
correction: felt
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English word spelling norms, the past tense of the verb 'feel' is an irregular form, and its correct spelling is 'felt'. Therefore, the incorrect spelling 〈flet〉 needs to be changed to 『felt』 here to conform to word spelling norms.

error_sentence: I flet I was a fish in the sea We played ball games in the sea.
correct_sentence: I felt I was a fish in the sea.
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English syntax rules, the clause 〈I was a fish in the sea〉 and 'We played...' contain independent subject-verb structures and belong to two different idea groups, thus needing to be separate sentences, separated by a period. A 『.』 needs to be added after 〈sea〉 to comply with English syntax rules.

error_sentence: Everybody looked very exciting.
correct_sentence: Everybody looked very excited.
error: exciting
correction: excited
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Adjective Error: According to English grammar rules, the adjective 'exciting' means 'something is causing excitement', while 'excited' should be used when the subject is a person. Here, the misused 〈exciting〉 needs to be changed to 『excited』 to conform to the original meaning and grammar rules.

error_sentence: Suddenly,my father said:"let's have a match ,about who is the fastest!"
correct_sentence: Suddenly, my father said, "Let's have a match about who is the fastest!"
error: said:"let
correction: said, "Let
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, the punctuation mark before direct speech is a comma, not a colon. Therefore, 〈:〉 needs to be changed to 『,』 to comply with English sentence writing conventions; ② Space Error: According to English syntax rules, sentences need to be separated by punctuation and a space to avoid run-on sentences. Therefore, a space needs to be added after 〈,〉 and before the direct speech; ③ Case Error: According to English syntax rules, the first letter of the first word in a sentence needs to be capitalized. Therefore, 〈let〉 needs to be changed to 『Let』 to comply with syntax rules.

error_sentence: Suddenly,my father said:"let's have a match ,about who is the fastest!"
correct_sentence: Suddenly, my father said, "Let's have a match about who is the fastest!"
error: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to the original sentence's meaning, it intends to express 'a match about xxx', which can be represented by the fixed phrase 'a match about...' without needing additional punctuation. Therefore, the redundant 〈,〉 needs to be deleted here to conform to English expression norms and the original meaning.

error_sentence: "okay!"
correct_sentence: "Okay!"
error: okay
correction: Okay
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English syntax rules, the first letter of the first word in a sentence needs to be capitalized. Therefore, 〈okay〉 needs to be changed to 『Okay』 to comply with syntax rules.

error_sentence: So we started a exciting match.
correct_sentence: So we started an exciting match.
error: a
correction: an
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English pronunciation rules, when an indefinite article is followed by a word beginning with a vowel sound, the indefinite article 'an' should be used. Therefore, the article 〈a〉 before the adjective 〈exciting〉 needs to be changed to 『an』 to comply with English pronunciation rules.

error_sentence: But we were very happy.

correct_sentence: But we were very happy. This summer holiday brought me many interesting things.
error: 

error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the original context and meaning, the clauses 〈But we were very happy〉 and 〈This summer holiday brought me many interesting things〉 belong to different paragraphs and need to be separated. Therefore, a paragraph separator needs to be used here to separate them to conform to the original context and meaning.

error_sentence: This summer holiday brought me many interesting things .And
correct_sentence: This summer holiday brought me many interesting things. And I was so intoxicated with the spirit of these.
error: .And
correction: . And
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English syntax rules, sentences need to be separated by punctuation and a space to avoid run-on sentences. Therefore, a space error exists here. A space needs to be added between sentences, changing 〈.And〉 to 〈. And〉 to comply with English syntax rules.