Writing prompt: My Life in the Future

Student essay:
I always imagine what my life will be like in the future.
Ten years later, maybe I will get married to a girl or maybe I will still live with my family.but I think I can live happily whoever I will stay with. As for my work, it would be very fantastic if I could be an engineer. I would get on well with my companies, and I would design a lot of works. which can stay a long time. I like to travel, so I wonder lf I can travel to different countries with my parents in the holidays.
To achieve my dream, I would work hard from now then.

Corrected essay:
I always imagine what my life will be like in the future.
Ten years later, maybe I will get married to a girl or maybe I will still live with my family. But I think I can live happily, whoever I stay with. As for my work, it would be very fantastic if I could be an engineer. I would get on well with my colleagues, and I would design a lot of works which can stay a long time. I like to travel, so I wonder if I can travel to different countries with my parents during the holidays.
To achieve my dream, I will work hard from now on.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Ten years later, maybe I will get married to a girl or maybe I will still live with my family.but
correct_sentence: Ten years later, maybe I will get married to a girl or maybe I will still live with my family. But I think I can live happily, whoever I stay with.
error: family.but
correction: family. But
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of the first word after a period should be capitalized; the first letter of 〈but〉 in the original sentence is not capitalized and should be changed to 『But』.

error_sentence: I think I can live happily whoever I will stay with.
correct_sentence: But I think I can live happily, whoever I stay with.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, a comma is needed before the adverbial clause 〈whoever I stay with〉 to separate the main clause and the subordinate clause, ensuring clear sentence structure. The original sentence is missing a comma between 〈happily whoever〉; a 『,』 should be added after 〈happily〉, resulting in 『But I think I can live happily, whoever I will stay with.』, which clearly separates sentence components and makes the meaning clearer and smoother.

error_sentence: I think I can live happily whoever I will stay with.
correct_sentence: But I think I can live happily, whoever I stay with.
error: will
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy: According to English grammar rules, in an adverbial clause introduced by 〈whoever〉, the simple present tense should be used to express the future. The 〈will〉 in the original sentence 〈whoever I will stay with〉 is redundant, which is a verb tense error. 〈will〉 should be deleted and corrected to 『whoever I stay with』 to make the sentence conform to English tense rules.

error_sentence: I would get on well with my companies, and I would design a lot of works.
correct_sentence: I would get on well with my colleagues, and I would design a lot of works which can stay a long time.
error: companies
correction: colleagues
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the sentence meaning, 〈companies〉 means 'corporations', which does not fit the context of 'getting along with work partners'. The noun 〈colleagues〉 means 'co-workers' and matches the sentence meaning. Therefore, 〈companies〉 in the original sentence is a noun error and should be changed to 『colleagues』 to accurately express the meaning 'I would get on well with my colleagues'.

error_sentence: I would get on well with my companies, and I would design a lot of works.
correct_sentence: I would get on well with my colleagues, and I would design a lot of works which can stay a long time.
error: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The period after 〈works.〉 in the original sentence breaks the sentence, preventing the subsequent relative clause from connecting correctly. According to English grammar rules, the period 〈.〉 after 〈works〉 should be removed to maintain sentence coherence, allowing the introduction of the relative clause 〈which can stay a long time〉, making the sentence structure complete and logically clear.

error_sentence: I like to travel, so I wonder lf I can travel to different countries with my parents in the holidays.

correct_sentence: I like to travel, so I wonder if I can travel to different countries with my parents during the holidays.

error: lf
correction: if
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to the sentence meaning, a conjunction meaning 'whether' is needed here; 〈If〉 is a spelling error caused by reversed letter order, the correct spelling should be 『if』, therefore 〈If〉 is changed to 『if』.

error_sentence: I like to travel, so I wonder lf I can travel to different countries with my parents in the holidays.

correct_sentence: I like to travel, so I wonder if I can travel to different countries with my parents during the holidays.

error: in
correction: during
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules, when expressing the time frame 'during the holidays', the preposition 〈during〉 should be used instead of 〈in〉; 〈in〉 in this context cannot accurately convey the meaning of 'throughout the entire holiday period', therefore the misused preposition 〈in〉 is replaced with 『during』 to make the expression conform to grammatical rules and be more precise.

error_sentence: To achieve my dream, I would work hard from now then.
correct_sentence: To achieve my dream, I will work hard from now on.
error: would
correction: will
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to English grammar rules, the simple future tense should be used when the main clause describes specific future plans. 〈would〉 expresses past hypotheses or intentions and does not fit the context of future plans here; this is a verb tense error. The hypothetical 〈would〉 should be changed to the more definite 『will』 to accurately express future effort.

error_sentence: To achieve my dream, I would work hard from now then.
correct_sentence: To achieve my dream, I will work hard from now on.
error: then
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English idiomatic expressions, the fixed phrase for 'from now on' is 'from now on', in which the preposition 'on' should be used; 〈then〉 in the original sentence does not conform to this fixed phrase, therefore 〈then〉 is replaced with 『on』 to comply with English idiomatic usage.