Writing prompt: Congratulations

Student essay:
Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china yet so I invite you to china my hometone to travel around . I will take you to see the famous and beautiful places in china

Corrected essay:
First of all, congratulations on being admitted to Princeton University.
I will give you some advice on your study. Of course, you should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class, because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the teachers questions to let the teachers pay attention to you, so you can study very well. I believe in you.
I think you haven't been to China yet so I invite you to China, my hometown, to travel around. I will take you to see the famous and beautiful places in China.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: First of all, congratulations on being admitted to Princeton University.

error: Frist
correction: First
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to standard English spelling rules, the letter order of the ordinal number 〈Frist〉 is incorrect; the correct spelling should be 『First』 to accurately express the meaning of “firstly” and ensure correct word spelling.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: First of all, congratulations on being admitted to Princeton University.

correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A necessary comma is missing after the introductory phrase 〈First of all〉; a comma should be added to make it 『First of all,』 to clearly distinguish the adverbial phrase from the main clause, making the sentence structure conform to English written expression punctuation norms.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: First of all, congratulations on being admitted to Princeton University.
 I will give you some advice on your study.
error: the Princeton University\nI
correction: Princeton University.
I
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to the convention for expressing proper nouns, the proper noun 〈Princeton University〉 as a specific institutional name does not require the definite article 〈the〉 before it; therefore, the redundant determiner 〈the〉 is deleted to maintain the correct expression of the proper noun; ② Punctuation Error: A period should be added after the complete statement 〈Princeton University〉 to make it 『Princeton University.』 to correctly end the sentence and form a standard separation between it and the subsequent sentence 『I will give you...』.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: I will give you some advice on your study. Of course, you should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class, because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the teachers questions to let the teachers pay attention to you, so you can study very well.
error: , of couse
correction: . Of course,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The current sentence 〈I will give you some advice on your study〉 is a complete statement, and the following 〈of course, you should listen...〉 is an independent new sentence; according to English expression norms, the connecting comma in 〈I will give you some advice on your study,〉 should be changed to a period 『I will give you some advice on your study.』 to achieve correct sentence separation; ② Case Error: According to English expression norms, since 『Of course』 is at the beginning of the sentence, its first letter 〈o〉 must be capitalized as 『O』 to conform to the English rule of capitalizing the first letter of a sentence; ③ Spelling Error: The word 〈couse〉 is misspelled; the correct form should be 『course』, expressing the meaning “of course”, and needs correction to ensure accuracy in word spelling.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: Of course, you should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class, because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the teachers questions to let the teachers pay attention to you, so you can study very well.
error: don't
correction: not
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Auxiliary Error: In the negative structure of the modal verb 〈should〉, "should not" should be used directly instead of the "should don't" structure; therefore, the incorrect structure 〈should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class〉 is corrected to the standard expression 『should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class』.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: Of course, you should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class, because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the teachers questions to let the teachers pay attention to you, so you can study very well.
error: the questions to
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: The verb 〈ask〉 can form a "ask sb. sth." double object structure; the original sentence 〈ask the teachers the questions to〉 contains redundant expression; after deleting the superfluous components 〈the questions to〉, it is changed to 『ask the teachers questions』, making the expression more concise and standard.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: Of course, you should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class, because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the teachers questions to let the teachers pay attention to you, so you can study very well.
correction: questions
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to English transitive verb usage rules, the verb 〈ask〉 as a transitive verb must be followed by a specific object. The original sentence lacks a necessary noun object, so 『questions』 is added to form the complete verb-object structure 『ask the teachers questions』, making the sentence semantically complete and grammatically correct.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: Of course, you should listen to the teachers carefully and not sleep in class, because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the teachers questions to let the teachers pay attention to you, so you can study very well.
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: English declarative sentences must end with a period, but the original sentence lacks a terminal punctuation mark. A period should be added at the end of the sentence to make it 『so you can study very well.』, making the sentence structure complete and conforming to formal writing norms.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: I believe in you.
 I think you haven't been to China
error: you\nI
correction: you.
I
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The clauses 〈I believe in you〉 and 〈I think you haven't been to china〉 are both complete independent sentences; according to English compound sentence norms, they must be separated by appropriate punctuation. A period is added after 〈you〉 and a line break is inserted to ensure the two complete sentences are correctly separated and the paragraph structure is clear.

error_sentence: Frist of all congratulations on being admitted to the Princeton University\nI will give you some advice on your study , of couse you should listen to the teachers carefully and don't sleep in class , because the class in the university is hard to learn and you must ask the questions to the teachers to let the teachers pay attention to you , so you can study very well I believe in you\nI think you haven't been to china
correct_sentence: I think you haven't been to China
error: china
correction: China
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: The country name 〈china〉, as a proper noun, must have its first letter capitalized according to English proper noun writing conventions. Therefore, it is corrected to 『China』, conforming to internationally accepted geographical name writing standards.

error_sentence: so I invite you to china my hometone to travel around .
correct_sentence: so I invite you to China, my hometown, to travel around.
error: china my hometone
correction: China, my hometown,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Case Error: The country name 〈china〉, as a proper noun, must have its first letter capitalized according to English proper noun writing conventions. Therefore, it is corrected to 『China』, conforming to internationally accepted geographical name writing standards; ② Punctuation Error: The phrase 〈my hometone〉 serves as an appositive to 『China』; according to English appositive punctuation rules, it needs to be set off by commas from the main clause. Commas are added after 『China』 and after 『hometown』 respectively, forming the structure 『China, my hometown,』 to make the relationship between sentence components clear and definite; ③ Spelling Error: The noun 〈hometone〉 is misspelled; based on its actual meaning and correct spelling, it is corrected to 『hometown』 to express the meaning “hometown”, ensuring accuracy in word spelling and correctness in meaning.

error_sentence: I will take you to see the famous and beautiful places in china
correct_sentence: I will take you to see the famous and beautiful places in China.
error: china
correction: China.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Case Error: The country name 〈china〉, as a proper noun, must have its first letter capitalized according to English proper noun writing conventions. Therefore, it is corrected to 『China』, conforming to internationally accepted geographical name writing standards; ② Punctuation Error: English declarative sentences must end with a period, but the original sentence lacks a terminal punctuation mark. A period should be added at the end of the sentence to make it 『I will take you to see the famous and beautiful places in China.』, making the sentence structure complete and conforming to formal writing norms.