Writing prompt: Write to China Daily

Student essay:
There are some problems of the environment.One of them is that the number of the population is increading.And now people is endlessly overdeveloping Earth's resources through agriculture, fishing, hunting and tourism,and that is a serious problem,too.Of course,the water resource is also a problem which we need to care about.Cutting trees too more will make the earth hotter,so it is a problem.In addition,the air pollution is a problem we can see every day.
If we want to remove these problems,we should do these things.First,we should hold back that people cut trees too more.And we had better control population growth.
Finally I hope the environment will be better in the future.

Corrected essay:
There are some problems of the environment. One of them is that the number of the population is increasing. And now people are endlessly overdeveloping Earth's resources through agriculture, fishing, hunting and tourism, and that is a serious problem, too. Of course, the water resource is also a problem which we need to care about. Cutting too many trees will make the Earth hotter, so it is a problem. In addition, air pollution is a problem we can see every day.
If we want to remove these problems, we should do these things. First, we should hold back people from cutting too many trees. And we had better control population growth.
Finally, I hope the environment will be better in the future.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: One of them is that the number of the population is increading.
correct_sentence: One of them is that the number of the population is increasing.
error: increading
correction: increasing
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express 'increase', therefore 〈increading〉 is a misspelling of 『increasing』, and it needs to be changed to 『increasing』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: And now people is endlessly overdeveloping Earth's resources through agriculture, fishing, hunting and tourism,and that is a serious problem,too.
correct_sentence: And now people are endlessly overdeveloping Earth's resources through agriculture, fishing, hunting and tourism, and that is a serious problem, too.
error: is
correction: are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈people〉 is plural, and the predicate 〈is〉 in the original sentence is in singular form, therefore the verb 〈is〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『are』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: Cutting trees too more will make the earth hotter,so it is a problem.
correct_sentence: Cutting too many trees will make the Earth hotter, so it is a problem.
error: trees too more
correction: too many trees
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Adjective Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'many'; the original phrase 〈too more〉 cannot modify the countable plural noun 〈trees〉, therefore 〈too more〉 needs to be changed to 『too many』 to conform to the meaning; ② Word Order Error: According to English expression habits, the quantity phrase 『too many』 should be placed before the noun it modifies, therefore 〈trees too more〉 needs to be changed to 『too many trees』 to conform to the expression.

error_sentence: Cutting trees too more will make the earth hotter,so it is a problem.
correct_sentence: Cutting too many trees will make the Earth hotter, so it is a problem.
error: earth
correction: Earth
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: The first letter of a proper noun needs to be capitalized; 〈earth〉 is a proper noun meaning 'the Earth', therefore 〈earth〉 needs to be changed to 『Earth』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: In addition,the air pollution is a problem we can see every day.

correct_sentence: In addition, air pollution is a problem we can see every day.

error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the definite article 〈the〉 indicates specificity; in the original sentence, 〈air pollution〉 is an uncountable noun and is used in a general sense here, not requiring a definite article, therefore 〈the air pollution〉 needs to be changed to 『air pollution』 to conform to English expression habits.

error_sentence: First,we should hold back that people cut trees too more.
correct_sentence: First, we should hold back people from cutting too many trees.
error: that people cut trees too more
correction: people from cutting too many trees
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, the definite article 〈the〉 indicates specificity; in the original sentence, 〈people〉 is used in a general sense here, not requiring a definite article, therefore 〈the people〉 needs to be changed to 『people』 to conform to English expression habits; ② Preposition Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'prevent people from cutting trees'; the original sentence lacks 『from』 to collocate with 〈hold back〉, therefore 〈cut〉 needs to be changed to 『from cutting』 to conform to the meaning; ③ Adjective Error: According to the context, the meaning here is 'many'; the original phrase 〈too more〉 cannot modify the countable plural noun 〈trees〉, therefore 〈too more〉 needs to be changed to 『too many』 to conform to the meaning; ④ Word Order Error: According to English expression habits, the quantity phrase 『too many』 should be placed before the noun it modifies, therefore 〈trees too more〉 needs to be changed to 『too many trees』 to conform to the expression.

error_sentence: Finally I hope the environment will be better in the future.
correct_sentence: Finally, I hope the environment will be better in the future.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, when 〈Finally〉 introduces a sentence, a comma is needed to separate it from the main clause, therefore 〈Finally〉 needs to be changed to 『Finally,』 to conform to expression habits.