Writing prompt: Guangzhou Culture Festival

Student essay:
Guangzhou Culture Festival
In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou,our shool held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival"last Saturday.In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us

Corrected essay:
Guangzhou Culture Festival
In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou, our school held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival" last Saturday. In the traditional culture festival, a lot of activities were held. The Cantonese Opera Competition was my favourite activity. Many students took part in the competition, because the music sounded beautiful, and the clothes were very beautiful.
In the Picture Show, we could see how Guangzhou changed. And we could learn Guangzhou's history and culture. We ate a lot of delicious food in the Food Show.
I hope that next year my school can hold The World of Knowledge Show. It can teach us a lot of knowledge.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou,our shool held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival"last Saturday.
correct_sentence: In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou, our school held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival" last Saturday.
error: shool
correction: school
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the original sentence, the intended meaning here is 'school', thus the word 〈shool〉 in the original sentence is misspelled; the correct spelling should be 『school』.

error_sentence: In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou,our shool held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival"last Saturday.
correct_sentence: In order to increase students' knowledge about the traditional culture of Guangzhou, our school held a "Guangzhou Culture Festival" last Saturday.
error: Festival"last
correction: Festival" last
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a necessary space is missing between the punctuation mark 〈"〉 and the word 〈last〉 in the original sentence; it should be modified to 『Festival" last』 to conform to writing standards.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: In the traditional culture festival, a lot of activities were held.
error: of Guangzhou it held
correction: festival,
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: In the adverbial phrase of the original sentence 〈In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,〉, the subject logic is confused; it is clear that the intended meaning here is 'in this traditional festival', so 〈of Guangzhou it held〉 is a redundant component and should be deleted. Therefore, we need to restructure it as 『In the traditional culture festival,』 to clarify the subject and event, and to ensure its grammatical accuracy as an adverbial component in the sentence; ② Punctuation Error: After adjusting the sentence structure of the original sentence, 『In the traditional culture festival,』 serves as an adverbial component of time, so a comma needs to be added after it to separate it from the main clause, thus it needs to be changed to 『festival,』.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: In the traditional culture festival, a lot of activities were held. The Cantonese Opera Competition was my favourite activity.
error: activies,
correction: activities were held. The
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the original sentence, the intention here is to express the plural of 'activity', so 〈activies〉 is an incorrect plural spelling form; the correct spelling should be 『activities』; ② Verb Voice Error: First, it is clear that the original sentence expresses 'some activities were held during the festival'. According to the English passive voice principle, when the agent of the action is unknown, the passive voice should be used, i.e., let 『a lot of activities』 be the subject and add the passive voice structure 'were held' 『were held』; ③ Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, after the original sentence is adjusted, there are two independent main clauses before and after the comma, and the punctuation mark is used incorrectly; it should be changed to a period. Therefore, 〈activies,〉 should be changed to 『activities were held.』; ④ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a one-letter space should be maintained between a comma or period and the following word, so a space needs to be added and changed to 『were held. 』; ⑤ Determiner Error: According to the original sentence, this indicates a specific reference, so the determiner 『The』 needs to be added before 〈Cantonese Opera Competition〉 to indicate specific reference, changing it to 『The Cantonese Opera Competition』.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: The Cantonese Opera Competition was my favourite activity.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the original text, this should be in the simple past tense; the verb 〈is〉 is used with an incorrect tense. When describing past events, the past tense 『was』 should be used.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: The Cantonese Opera Competition was my favourite activity. Many students took part in the competition, because the music sounded beautiful, and the clothes were very beautiful.

error: activies,Many student were take
correction: activity. Many students took
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the original sentence, 'it is my favorite activity', the subject is singular, and the noun should remain singular. Thus, 〈activies〉 is misspelled and incorrectly used in the plural form; it needs to be changed to 『activity』; ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when a sentence ends, the correct punctuation mark should be used. From the declarative sentence of the original, the comma here should be changed to a period, meaning 〈activies,〉 should be 『activity.』; ③ Space Error: According to writing conventions, a standard character space should be maintained between a comma or period and the next word, so 〈,Many〉 should be changed to 『. Many』; ④ Noun Number Error: According to noun number agreement rules, the expression for 'many students' 〈Many〉 needs to be followed by a plural countable noun form, so 〈Many student〉 should be changed to 『Many students』; ⑤ Auxiliary Error: According to the sentence structure of the original sentence, this expresses 'many students participated in this competition'. It is clear that this sentence is in the simple past tense, active voice, the predicate verb needs to be in the simple past tense 『took』, and no extra auxiliary verb 'be' is needed, so 〈were take〉 should be changed to 『took』.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: Many students took part in the competition, because the music sounded beautiful, and the clothes were very beautiful.

correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: The necessary determiner 『the』 is missing to modify the specific noun 〈competition〉, so 『the』 needs to be added to make the meaning complete.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: Many students took part in the competition, because the music sounded beautiful, and the clothes were very beautiful.

error: music was sound beautidul,cloths are
correction: the music sounded beautiful, and the clothes were
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The necessary determiner 『the』 is missing to modify the specific noun 〈music〉, so 『the』 needs to be added to make the meaning complete; ② Auxiliary Error: According to English sensory verb usage rules, to express 'how something sounds', the structure 'noun as subject + sensory verb like sound + adjective' can be used directly. Therefore, 〈was〉 in the original sentence is redundant and needs to be deleted, and the predicate verb 'sound' should be changed to the corresponding simple past tense, i.e., 〈was sound〉 needs to be changed to 『sounded』 to comply with grammatical rules; ③ Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the original sentence, the intention here is to express 'sounds beautiful', thus 〈beautidul〉 in the original sentence is misspelled and needs to be changed to 『beautiful』; ④ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a one-letter space should be maintained between a comma or period and the following word, so a space needs to be added and changed to 『, and』; ⑤ Conjunction Error: According to the sentence structure of the original sentence, a comma cannot directly connect two sentences with complete subject-verb structures, so a conjunction 'and' needs to be added between the two main clauses, i.e., it should be changed to 『, and』; ⑥ Determiner Error: The necessary determiner 『the』 is missing to modify the specific noun 〈cloths〉, so 『the clothes』 needs to be added to make the meaning complete; ⑦ Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the original sentence, the intention here is to express 'clothes', thus 〈cloths〉 in the original sentence, meaning 'fabrics', is a spelling error and needs to be changed to 『clothes』; ⑧ Verb Tense Error: According to the tense of the original sentence, this is in the simple past tense, and the linking verb needs to be in the simple past form, so 〈are〉 needs to be changed to 『were』 to fit the context of describing the past.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: Many students took part in the competition, because the music sounded beautiful, and the clothes were very beautiful.

correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when a sentence ends, the correct punctuation mark should be used. From the declarative sentence of the original, a period should be added here, meaning 〈beautiful〉 should be 『beautiful.』;

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: In the Picture Show, we could see how Guangzhou changed.
error: Picture show
correction: the Picture Show
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The necessary determiner 『the』 is missing to modify the proper noun 〈Picture show〉, so 『the』 needs to be added to make the meaning complete; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of the word at the beginning of a sentence and the first letter of proper nouns need to be capitalized. Here, it means 'Picture Show', so 〈show〉 needs to be changed to 『Show』 to conform to the intended meaning and writing standards.

error_sentence: In the traditional culture of Guangzhou it held a lot of activies,Cantonese Opera Competition is my favourite activies,Many student were take part in competition,because music was sound beautidul,cloths are very beautiful
In Picture show,we can saw Guangzhou changed.
correct_sentence: In the Picture Show, we could see how Guangzhou changed.
error: can saw
correction: could see how
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the tense of the original sentence, this is in the simple past tense, and the modal verb needs to be in the past form. Therefore, 〈can saw〉 is an incorrect tense usage and needs to be changed to 『could see』 to fit the context of describing the past. ② Sentence Structure Error: According to the sentence structure and meaning of the original sentence, this expresses 'what kind of changes Guangzhou underwent'. Here, 'how' needs to be added as an interrogative adverb to introduce the object clause 'how Guangzhou changed', i.e., changed to 『how Guangzhou changed』.

error_sentence: And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us
correct_sentence: And we could learn Guangzhou's history and culture.
error: can
correction: could
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ⑧ Verb Tense Error: According to the tense of the original sentence, this is in the simple past tense, and the auxiliary verb needs to be in the past form, so 〈can〉 needs to be changed to 『could』 to fit the context of describing the past.

error_sentence: And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us
correct_sentence: And we could learn Guangzhou's history and culture.
correction: 's
error_type: Noun Possessive Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Possessive Error: According to the meaning of the original sentence, 〈Guangzhou history〉 needs to have the possessive 『's』 added to express the possessive relationship 'Guangzhou's history'; the correct form is 『Guangzhou's history』.

error_sentence: And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us
correct_sentence: And we could learn Guangzhou's history and culture. We ate a lot of delicious food in the Food Show.

error: 
we can
correction: . We
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when a sentence ends, the correct punctuation mark should be used. From the declarative sentence of the original, a period should be added here, meaning 〈we〉 should be changed to 『. We』; ② Auxiliary Error: According to English grammatical structure usage rules, to express the past structure 'we ate...', 'we ate' can be used directly. Therefore, 〈can〉 in the original sentence is redundant and needs to be deleted.

error_sentence: And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us
correct_sentence: We ate a lot of delicious food in the Food Show.

error: Food show
correction: the Food Show
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Determiner Error: The necessary determiner 『the』 is missing to modify the specific noun 〈Food show〉, so 『the』 needs to be added to make the meaning complete; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of the word at the beginning of a sentence and the first letter of proper nouns need to be capitalized. Here, it means 'Food Show', so 〈show〉 needs to be changed to 『Show』 to conform to the intended meaning and writing standards.

error_sentence: And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us
correct_sentence: I hope that next year my school can hold The World of Knowledge Show.
error: the
correction: that
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, the object clause lacks the introductory word 『that』 to connect the main clause and the subordinate clause, to introduce the clause and conform to grammatical rules, so 『that』 should be added after 〈hope〉; ② Determiner Error: According to English noun usage conventions, when expressing the time adverbial 'next year', it does not require the determiner 〈the〉 to modify it; it should be deleted.

error_sentence: And we can learn Guangzhou history and culture
we can ate a lot of delicious food in Food show
I hope the next year my school can held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us
correct_sentence: I hope that next year my school can hold The World of Knowledge Show. It can teach us a lot of knowledge.
error: held out The world of knowledge show.it can learn a lof of Knowledge for us
correction: hold The World of Knowledge Show. It can teach us a lot of knowledge.
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the English grammatical structure 'can + base form of verb', the predicate verb here needs to be in its base form, so 〈held〉 needs to be changed to 『hold』 to conform to grammatical standards; ② Preposition Error: According to the meaning of the original sentence 'the school will hold... next year', using just 『hold』 can express 'to hold (an event)'. 〈held out〉 means 'to persist, to maintain', so to match the original meaning, the preposition 〈out〉 needs to be deleted; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of the word at the beginning of a sentence and the first letter of proper nouns need to be capitalized. Here, it means 'The World of Knowledge Show', so 〈show〉 needs to be changed to 『Show』 to conform to the intended meaning and writing standards; ④ Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a one-letter space should be maintained between a comma or period and the following word, so a space needs to be added and changed to 『. It』; ⑤ Verb Choice Error: According to the meaning of the original sentence 'it can teach us a lot of knowledge', because the subject is 'it', the verb should be 'teach' not 'learn', so 〈learn〉 needs to be changed to 『teach』; ⑥ Sentence Structure Error: This expresses 'it can teach us a lot of knowledge'. The structure 'subject + teach + object + sth.' or 'subject + learn + sth. + from + object' can be used. The original sentence has a confused structure. Therefore, according to the principle of minimal change, add the object 『us』 after the predicate verb and delete the redundant 〈for us〉 at the end of the original sentence, i.e., change it to 『It can teach us a lot of knowledge.』; ⑦ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈Knowledge〉 in the original sentence does not need to be capitalized, so it should be changed to 『knowledge』. ⑧ Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when a sentence ends, the correct punctuation mark should be used. From the declarative sentence of the original, a period should be added here, meaning 〈us〉 should be changed to 『knowledge.』.