Writing prompt: Love around Me

Student essay:
I feel so lucky that there are a lot of love around me.l think i am the happiest person in the world.My father who works as a worker in company where lives far away Shanghai .He often shows his love to me.Although he goes home twice a month,he always make phone calls to me.When l doesn't work well,he encourages me instead of scolding me.At that time,l feel i am the happiest person in the world.Afterwards,we should help others who is in trouble.Forexample,when our classmates can't work out a mathes problem,we should try our best to help them.
In one word,the more love we have ,the happier we will be!!!

Corrected essay:
I feel so lucky that there is a lot of love around me. I think I am the happiest person in the world. My father who works as a worker in a company far away from Shanghai, often shows his love to me. Although he goes home twice a month, he always makes phone calls to me. When I don't work well, he encourages me instead of scolding me. At that time, I feel I am the happiest person in the world. Afterwards, we should help others who are in trouble. For example, when our classmates can't work out a math problem, we should try our best to help them.
In one word, the more love we have, the happier we will be!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I feel so lucky that there are a lot of love around me.l think i am the happiest person in the world.
correct_sentence: I feel so lucky that there is a lot of love around me.
error: are
correction: is
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈a lot of love〉 is an uncountable noun and requires a singular verb, so 〈are〉 is changed to 『is』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: I feel so lucky that there are a lot of love around me.l think i am the happiest person in the world.
correct_sentence: I feel so lucky that there is a lot of love around me. I think I am the happiest person in the world.
error: me.l think i
correction: me. I think I
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, punctuation at the end of a sentence should be followed by a space before the first word of the next sentence, so 〈me.l〉 is changed to 『me. I』 to conform to the convention; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 'I' as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of whether it is at the beginning or in the middle of the sentence, so 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: My father who works as a worker in company where lives far away Shanghai .He often shows his love to me.
correct_sentence: My father who works as a worker in a company far away from Shanghai, often shows his love to me.
error: company where lives
correction: a company
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: 〈company〉 is a singular countable noun and needs to be modified by the article 『a』 before it, so 〈company〉 is changed to 『a company』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Word Redundancy Error: The clause 〈where lives far away〉 has a confusing structure; the prepositional phrase 『far away from』 should be used directly to mean 'far away from Shanghai', so 〈where lives〉 is deleted to standardize the sentence structure.

error_sentence: My father who works as a worker in company where lives far away Shanghai .He often shows his love to me.
correct_sentence: My father who works as a worker in a company far away from Shanghai, often shows his love to me.
error: Shanghai .He
correction: from Shanghai,
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: To express distance, the fixed phrase 『far away from』 is needed, so 〈Shanghai〉 is changed to 『from Shanghai』 to conform to idiomatic expression; ② Punctuation Error: A comma is needed to connect the main clause and the subordinate clause, so 〈.〉 is changed to 『,』 to standardize the sentence structure; ③ Word Redundancy Error: The subject is 〈My father〉, which is modified by a relative clause, so 〈He〉 is deleted to standardize the sentence structure.

error_sentence: Although he goes home twice a month,he always make phone calls to me.
correct_sentence: Although he goes home twice a month, he always makes phone calls to me.
error: make
correction: makes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈he〉 is third-person singular and requires the third-person singular form of the verb, so 〈make〉 is changed to 『makes』 to conform to subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: When l doesn't work well,he encourages me instead of scolding me.
correct_sentence: When I don't work well, he encourages me instead of scolding me.
error: l does
correction: I do
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect and should be the capital letter 『I』, so 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: At that time,l feel i am the happiest person in the world.
correct_sentence: At that time, I feel I am the happiest person in the world.
error: l feel i
correction: I feel I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect and should be the capital letter 『I』, so 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, 'I' as a first-person pronoun must always be capitalized in a sentence, regardless of whether it is at the beginning or in the middle of the sentence, so 〈i〉 needs to be changed to 『I』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: Afterwards,we should help others who is in trouble.
correct_sentence: Afterwards, we should help others who are in trouble.
error: is
correction: are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The relative pronoun 〈who〉 refers to the plural noun 〈others〉, and the verb needs to be in the plural form, so 〈is〉 is changed to 『are』 to conform to subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: Forexample,when our classmates can't work out a mathes problem,we should try our best to help them.

correct_sentence: For example, when our classmates can't work out a math problem, we should try our best to help them.

error: Forexample
correction: For example
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, words must be separated by spaces. In this sentence, 〈For〉 and 〈example〉 are two separate words and need to be separated by a space, so 〈Forexample〉 is changed to 『For example』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: Forexample,when our classmates can't work out a mathes problem,we should try our best to help them.

correct_sentence: For example, when our classmates can't work out a math problem, we should try our best to help them.

error: mathes
correction: math
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is clear that 'mathematics' is intended here, so 〈mathes〉 is a misspelling of 『math』 and needs to be changed to 『math』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: In one word,the more love we have ,the happier we will be!!!
correct_sentence: In one word, the more love we have, the happier we will be!
error: !!
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: In English, exclamatory sentences usually use only a single exclamation mark, so 〈!!〉 is deleted to conform to standard writing conventions.