Writing prompt: Scribbling and Littering

Student essay:
The reason why I 'm writing to you is that I saw people scribbling and littering wherever they liked when I was traveling at the tourist attractions.
My heart was cold when I stood on the same ground with them.How could people make the payments to nature like this?In my opinion,they need to be punished, don't they?First and foremost,it is the environment in which human beings are developing for thousands of years.Secondly,I can't stand that a person lives without a kind and modest heart in this peaceful world.
Therefore,I've got some suggestions for you to protect our social environment. To start with,giving advice to fine those who is not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them away from it.Moreover,you'd better help people have a clearer idea about the environment by enhancement of education.

Corrected essay:
The reason why I'm writing to you is that I saw people scribbling and littering wherever they liked when I was traveling at the tourist attractions.
My heart was cold when I stood on the same ground with them. How could people make the payments to nature like this? In my opinion, they need to be punished, don't they? First and foremost, it is the environment in which human beings have been developing for thousands of years. Secondly, I can't stand that a person lives without a kind and modest heart in this peaceful world.
Therefore, I've got some suggestions for you to protect our social environment. To start with, giving advice on fining those who are not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them from destroying the environment. Moreover, you'd better help people have a clearer idea about environment by enhancing education.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: The reason why I 'm writing to you is that I saw people scribbling and littering wherever they liked when I was traveling at the tourist attractions.

correct_sentence: The reason why I'm writing to you is that I saw people scribbling and littering wherever they liked when I was traveling at the tourist attractions.

error: 'm
correction: 'm
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English contraction writing conventions, there should be no space before the apostrophe in the first-person contraction 〈I 'm〉; it should be changed to the standard form 『I'm』 to comply with English writing conventions.

error_sentence: How could people make the payments to nature like this?In my opinion,they need to be punished, don't they?First and foremost,it is the environment in which human beings are developing for thousands of years.
correct_sentence: How could people make the payments to nature like this? In my opinion, they need to be punished, don't they?
error: this?In
correction: this? In
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space needs to be added after a question mark 〈?〉 as an end-of-sentence punctuation mark before starting a new sentence. Change 〈this?In〉 to the standard format 『this? In』 to ensure formatting consistency.

error_sentence: How could people make the payments to nature like this?In my opinion,they need to be punished, don't they?First and foremost,it is the environment in which human beings are developing for thousands of years.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, they need to be punished, don't they? First and foremost, it is the environment in which human beings have been developing for thousands of years.
error: they?First
correction: they? First
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: Continuing punctuation conventions, correct 〈they?First〉 to 『they? First』, ensuring a standard space is maintained after the question mark.

error_sentence: How could people make the payments to nature like this?In my opinion,they need to be punished, don't they?First and foremost,it is the environment in which human beings are developing for thousands of years.
correct_sentence: First and foremost, it is the environment in which human beings have been developing for thousands of years.
error: are
correction: have been
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: Based on contextual analysis, to describe the long-term development process of human beings, the present perfect continuous tense should be used to emphasize continuity. Change the present tense 〈are〉 to 『have been』 to accurately reflect the time dimension.

error_sentence: Therefore,I've got some suggestions for you to protect our social environment.
correct_sentence: Therefore, I've got some suggestions for you to protect our social environment.
error: I've
correction: I've
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, when the conjunctive adverb 〈Therefore〉 is used as a transition word, it should be separated from the main clause by a comma followed by a space according to convention. Correct the run-on form 〈Therefore,I've〉 to 『Therefore, I've』.

error_sentence: To start with,giving advice to fine those who is not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them away from it.
correct_sentence: To start with, giving advice on fining those who are not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them from destroying the environment.
error: to fine
correction: on fining
error_type: 非谓语动词错误
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English collocation principles, the verb phrase 〈giving advice〉 must be paired with the preposition 『on』 to introduce the area of advice. The original incorrect pairing 〈to fine〉 violates this grammatical rule, thus it is corrected to 『on fining』; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the requirement for verb forms after prepositions, the preposition 『on』 must be followed by a gerund. Change the base form of the verb 〈fine〉 to the grammatically correct gerund 『fining』, forming the correct structure 『on fining』.

error_sentence: To start with,giving advice to fine those who is not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them away from it.
correct_sentence: To start with, giving advice on fining those who are not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them from destroying the environment.
error: is
correction: are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the principle of subject-verb agreement, when the plural demonstrative pronoun 〈those〉 is the subject, it requires a plural linking verb. Change the singular form 〈is〉 to 『are』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: To start with,giving advice to fine those who is not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them away from it.
correct_sentence: To start with, giving advice on fining those who are not friendly to nature to the government is the most direct way to keep them from destroying the environment.
error: away from it
correction: from destroying the environment
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: Based on the preceding semantics, the original expression 〈keep them away from it〉 is vague in its reference; optimizing it to 『keep them from destroying the environment』 clearly states the purpose of the action, which is 'to prevent the destruction of the environment'.

error_sentence: Moreover,you'd better help people have a clearer idea about the environment by enhancement of education.
correct_sentence: Moreover, you'd better help people have a clearer idea about environment by enhancing education.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to definite article usage rules, when 〈environment〉 refers to the general concept of the ecological environment, the redundant definite article 『the』 should be deleted to make the expression more concise and natural.

error_sentence: Moreover,you'd better help people have a clearer idea about the environment by enhancement of education.
correct_sentence: Moreover, you'd better help people have a clearer idea about environment by enhancing education.
error: enhancement of
correction: enhancing
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① PoS Confusion: According to English verb collocation rules, the verb 〈help〉 should be followed by a gerund or an infinitive as its object. The original noun phrase 〈enhancement of〉 does not conform to this grammatical structure, therefore change the noun 〈enhancement〉 to the gerund 『enhancing』; ② Preposition Error: Simultaneously correct the redundant preposition 〈of〉 in the noun phrase, simplifying the expression to the grammatically correct 『enhancing education』, which both resolves the part-of-speech issue and optimizes preposition usage.