Writing prompt: Highlights of My High School

Student essay:
Hello !
l am Li Hua. l had just graduated from high school. High school life is colorful in retorspect my classmates
and teachers get along very well. Often help each other.
l am very hardworking . So my results was good. But l do not like join outdoor sports. l am so tired.What
most pleased me was that l had done very well that l had done very well in college entrance examination.
l am so happy.
High school three years have very good l grow a lot.
thank you

Corrected essay:
Hello!
I am Li Hua. I had just graduated from high school. High school life was colorful in retrospect. My classmates and teachers got along very well and often helped each other.
I was very hardworking, so my results were good. But I did not like joining outdoor sports because I was so tired. What pleased me most was that I had done very well in the college entrance examination. I am so happy. The three years of high school were very good, and I grew a lot.
Thank you.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Hello !
l am Li Hua.
correct_sentence: Hello!
I am Li Hua.
error: l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect, it should be the uppercase letter 『I』, therefore 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: l had just graduated from high school.
correct_sentence: I had just graduated from high school.
error: l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect, it should be the uppercase letter 『I』, therefore 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: High school life is colorful in retorspect my classmates
and teachers get along very well.
correct_sentence: High school life was colorful in retrospect.
error: is
correction: was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, the verb needs to be in the past tense, therefore 〈is〉 is changed to 『was』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: High school life is colorful in retorspect my classmates
and teachers get along very well.
correct_sentence: High school life was colorful in retrospect. My classmates and teachers got along very well and often helped each other.

error: retorspect my classmates

correction: retrospect. My classmates
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express “retrospect”, therefore 〈retorspect〉 is a misspelling of 『retrospect』, and 〈retorspect〉 needs to be changed to 『retrospect』 to make the sentence meaning coherent; ② Punctuation Error: 〈High school life is colorful in retorspect〉 and 〈my classmates and teachers get along very well〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, therefore a 『.』 will be added after 『retrospect』 and 〈my〉 will be changed to 『My』.

error_sentence: High school life is colorful in retorspect my classmates
and teachers get along very well.
correct_sentence: My classmates and teachers got along very well and often helped each other.

error: get
correction: got
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, the verb needs to be in the past tense form, therefore 〈get〉 is changed to 『got』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: High school life is colorful in retorspect my classmates
and teachers get along very well. Often help each other.

correct_sentence: My classmates and teachers got along very well and often helped each other.

error: . Often help
correction: and often helped
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: The actions here need to be connected by the conjunction 『and』, therefore 〈. Often〉 is changed to 『and often』 to maintain sentence coherence; ② Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, the verb needs to be in the past tense form, therefore 〈help〉 is changed to 『helped』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: l am very hardworking .
correct_sentence: I was very hardworking, so my results were good.
error: l am
correction: I was
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect, it should be the uppercase letter 『I』, therefore 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, the verb needs to be in the past tense form, therefore 〈am〉 is changed to 『was』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: l am very hardworking . So my results was good.
correct_sentence: I was very hardworking, so my results were good.
error: . So
correction: , so
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The result clause introduced by the conjunction 〈So〉 needs to be connected to the main clause with a comma, therefore 〈. So〉 is changed to 『, so』 to maintain sentence coherence.

error_sentence: So my results was good.
correct_sentence: I was very hardworking, so my results were good.
error: was
correction: were
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈results〉 is plural, the verb needs to be in the plural form, therefore 〈was〉 is changed to 『were』 to comply with subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: But l do not like join outdoor sports.
correct_sentence: But I did not like joining outdoor sports because I was so tired.
error: l do
correction: I did
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect, it should be the uppercase letter 『I』, therefore 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, the verb needs to be in the past tense form, therefore 〈do〉 is changed to 『did』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: But l do not like join outdoor sports.
correct_sentence: But I did not like joining outdoor sports because I was so tired.
error: join
correction: joining
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, the verb 〈like〉 needs to be followed by the gerund form, therefore 〈join〉 is changed to 『joining』.

error_sentence: But l do not like join outdoor sports. l am so tired.
correct_sentence: But I did not like joining outdoor sports because I was so tired.
error: . l am
correction: because I was
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: There is a causal relationship between the two clauses, 『because』 needs to be used to connect the main clause with the adverbial clause of reason, therefore 〈.〉 is changed to 『because』 to make the sentence meaning coherent; ② Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect, it should be the uppercase letter 『I』, therefore 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions; ③ Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, the verb needs to be in the past tense form, therefore 〈am〉 is changed to 『was』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: What
most pleased me was that l had done very well that l had done very well in college entrance examination.

correct_sentence: What pleased me most was that I had done very well in the college entrance examination.
error: 
most pleased me
correction: pleased me most
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Order Error: The adverb 〈most〉 should be placed after the verb it modifies, therefore 〈most pleased me〉 is changed to 『pleased me most』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: What
most pleased me was that l had done very well that l had done very well in college entrance examination.

correct_sentence: What pleased me most was that I had done very well in the college entrance examination.
error: l had done very well that l
correction: I
error_type: Sentence Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Redundancy Error: There is a repetitive structure 〈l had done very well that l had done very well〉 in the sentence, therefore 〈l had done very well that l〉 is changed to 『I』 to correctly express the sentence meaning.

error_sentence: What
most pleased me was that l had done very well that l had done very well in college entrance examination.

correct_sentence: What pleased me most was that I had done very well in the college entrance examination.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: This specifically refers to the college entrance examination, which needs to be modified by a definite article, therefore 『the』 is added before 〈college〉 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: What
most pleased me was that l had done very well that l had done very well in college entrance examination.
 l am so happy.

correct_sentence: I am so happy.
error: 
l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect, it should be the uppercase letter 『I』, therefore 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: l am so happy.
 High school three years have very good l grow a lot.

correct_sentence: The three years of high school were very good, and I grew a lot.

error: 
High school
correction: The
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: A definite article is needed here to specifically refer to “the three years of high school”, therefore 〈High school〉 is changed to 『The』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: High school three years have very good l grow a lot.

correct_sentence: The three years of high school were very good, and I grew a lot.

error: have
correction: of high school were
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence is logically confused and semantically unclear; considering the context, it is known that the intention here is to express “My three years of high school were very good”, therefore 〈have〉 is changed to 『of high school were』 to make the meaning coherent and comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: High school three years have very good l grow a lot.

correct_sentence: The three years of high school were very good, and I grew a lot.

error: l grow
correction: , and I grew
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: 『The three years of high school were very good』 and 〈l grow a lot〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and can be independent sentences, therefore 『, and』 is added after 〈good〉 to comply with grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: 〈l〉 is incorrect, it should be the uppercase letter 『I』, therefore 〈l〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to English writing conventions; ③ Verb Tense Error: This describes a past event, the verb needs to be in the past tense form, therefore 〈grow〉 is changed to 『grew』 to conform to the contextual tense.

error_sentence: thank you
correct_sentence: Thank you.
error: thank you
correction: Thank you.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized, therefore 〈thank〉 needs to be changed to 『Thank』 to conform to conventions; ② Punctuation Error: A punctuation mark is missing at the end of the sentence to conclude it, therefore a 『.』 is added after 〈you〉 to conform to writing conventions.