Writing prompt: Wisdom can Create Miracles

Student essay:
There's many valuable things in our life .Money,wisdom,truth,power and beauty are all very useful and attractive.But as my perspective,with no doubt that wisdom is the most important thing among them.
First,there must be a number of people say that money can buy everything they want,so money is
absolutely the most important ,or others think truth ,power and beauty is the first choice.Now,let me tell you the fact.If you have no money,you can earn it by wisdom;if you are confused in life,you can overcome it by your wisdom but not abstract truth;if you desire power,wisdom can help gain it;if you admire beauty,wisdom makes you beautiful not only apperance but also inner.
Second,why wisdom is more powerful?The reason it what?How it works?Take city construction as an example,large amount of money is necessary,but how to make full use of it without wasting needs big wisdom.Properly distributing and bravely investing are thanks to wisdom.In the 21th century,such magnificent wonders as The Oriental Pearl TV Tower are built to decorate our wonderful city,which are all thanks to wisdom.
In the final,wisdom exists in our mind.Human is the highest level in animals and have the highest intelligence.If we stimulate our wisdom at the bottom of our heart,one by one miracles will be created in the near future!

Corrected essay:
There are many valuable things in our life. Money, wisdom, truth, power and beauty are all very useful and attractive. But from my perspective, without a doubt, wisdom is the most important thing among them.
First, there must be a number of people who say that money can buy everything they want, so money is absolutely the most important, or others think truth, power and beauty are the first choices. Now, let me tell you the facts. If you have no money, you can earn it by wisdom; if you are confused in life, you can overcome it with your wisdom but not abstract truth; if you desire power, wisdom can help you gain it; if you admire beauty, wisdom makes you beautiful not only in appearance but also inner beauty.
Second, why is wisdom more powerful? What is the reason? How does it work? Take city construction as an example. A large amount of money is necessary, but how to make full use of it without wasting it needs big wisdom. Properly distributing and bravely investing are thanks to wisdom. In the 21st century, such magnificent wonders as The Oriental Pearl TV Tower are built to decorate our wonderful city, which is all thanks to wisdom. Finally, wisdom exists in our minds. Humans are the highest level of animals and have the highest intelligence. If we stimulate our wisdom at the bottom of our hearts, one by one miracles will be created in the near future!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: There's many valuable things in our life .Money,wisdom,truth,power and beauty are all very useful and attractive.
correct_sentence: There are many valuable things in our life.
error: 's
correction: are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English existential sentence grammar rules, when the subject 〈many valuable things〉 is plural, the linking verb needs to be in the plural form 『are』. Therefore, the singular contracted form 〈There's〉 is changed to 『There are』, forming the correct subject-verb agreement structure 『There are many valuable things』.

error_sentence: There's many valuable things in our life .Money,wisdom,truth,power and beauty are all very useful and attractive.
correct_sentence: There are many valuable things in our life. Money, wisdom, truth, power and beauty are all very useful and attractive.
error: .Money
correction: . Money
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space must be kept between the period 〈.Money〉 and the first word of the next sentence 〈Money〉. A space should be added to form a standard inter-sentence interval, changing to 『. Money』.

error_sentence: But as my perspective,with no doubt that wisdom is the most important thing among them.

correct_sentence: But from my perspective, without a doubt, wisdom is the most important thing among them.

error: as
correction: from
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to fixed expressions, the phrase to express a personal viewpoint should use 『from my perspective』 (from my point of view), not 〈as my perspective〉. The preposition 〈as〉 is changed to 『from』 to conform to standard usage.

error_sentence: But as my perspective,with no doubt that wisdom is the most important thing among them.

correct_sentence: But from my perspective, without a doubt, wisdom is the most important thing among them.

error: with no doubt that
correction: without a doubt,
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English idiomatic expressions, 〈with no〉 does not conform to common usage; the preposition 『without』 means "without"; the preposition 〈with〉 is changed to 『without』 to conform to English expression habits; ② Determiner Error: According to noun determination rules, the countable noun 〈doubt〉 in its singular form must have a determiner. The indefinite article 『a』 is correctly added to the modified phrase 〈with no doubt that〉 and changed to 『without a doubt』; ③ Punctuation Error: According to the usage rules for parenthetical phrases, 『without a doubt』 as a sentence adverbial needs to be separated by a comma; after adding a comma, it becomes 『without a doubt,』; ④ Word Redundancy Error: The modified standard expression 『without a doubt,』 already fully expresses the meaning; the redundant relative word 〈that〉 is deleted, making the sentence structure a concise form of 『without a doubt, wisdom is...』.

error_sentence: First,there must be a number of people say that money can buy everything they want,so money is
absolutely the most important ,or others think truth ,power and beauty is the first choice.
correct_sentence: First, there must be a number of people who say that money can buy everything they want, so money is absolutely the most important, or others think truth, power and beauty are the first choices.
correction: who
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Relative Word Error: According to relative clause rules, 〈people say〉 as a relative clause lacks a relative pronoun. Add 『who』 to form the complete relative clause structure 『people who say』.

error_sentence: First,there must be a number of people say that money can buy everything they want,so money is
absolutely the most important ,or others think truth ,power and beauty is the first choice.
correct_sentence: First, there must be a number of people who say that money can buy everything they want, so money is absolutely the most important, or others think truth, power and beauty are the first choices.
error: 

error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Format Error: According to the principle of sentence integrity, there should not be a line break 〈\n〉 in the middle of the predicative structure 〈money is \n absolutely the most important〉. Delete the line break to maintain sentence coherence.

error_sentence: First,there must be a number of people say that money can buy everything they want,so money is
absolutely the most important ,or others think truth ,power and beauty is the first choice.
correct_sentence: First, there must be a number of people who say that money can buy everything they want, so money is absolutely the most important, or others think truth, power and beauty are the first choices.
error: is
correction: are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, a plural subject formed by three coordinate nouns 〈truth, power and beauty〉 must use a plural verb form. Therefore, the singular verb 〈is〉 is changed to the plural form 『are』, forming the correct subject-verb agreement structure 『Truth, power and beauty are』.

error_sentence: First,there must be a number of people say that money can buy everything they want,so money is
absolutely the most important ,or others think truth ,power and beauty is the first choice.
correct_sentence: First, there must be a number of people who say that money can buy everything they want, so money is absolutely the most important, or others think truth, power and beauty are the first choices.
error: choice
correction: choices
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the principle of contextual semantic consistency, the noun 〈choice〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『choices』 to maintain number agreement with the preceding plural subject 〈truth, power and beauty〉, forming a reasonable collocation.

error_sentence: Now,let me tell you the fact.
correct_sentence: Now, let me tell you the facts.
error: fact
correction: facts
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English expression habits, when generally referring to the concept of "facts," the plural form 『facts』 should be used instead of the singular form. Therefore, 〈fact〉 is changed to 『facts』 to match the contextual semantics.

error_sentence: If you have no money,you can earn it by wisdom;if you are confused in life,you can overcome it by your wisdom but not abstract truth;if you desire power,wisdom can help gain it;if you admire beauty,wisdom makes you beautiful not only apperance but also inner.

correct_sentence: If you have no money, you can earn it by wisdom; if you are confused in life, you can overcome it with your wisdom but not abstract truth; if you desire power, wisdom can help you gain it; if you admire beauty, wisdom makes you beautiful not only in appearance but also inner beauty.

error: wisdom;if
correction: wisdom; if
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation usage rules, a space must be kept between the semicolon 〈wisdom;if〉 and the subsequent word 〈if〉. A space should be added to form the standard format 『wisdom; if』.

error_sentence: If you have no money,you can earn it by wisdom;if you are confused in life,you can overcome it by your wisdom but not abstract truth;if you desire power,wisdom can help gain it;if you admire beauty,wisdom makes you beautiful not only apperance but also inner.

correct_sentence: If you have no money, you can earn it by wisdom; if you are confused in life, you can overcome it with your wisdom but not abstract truth; if you desire power, wisdom can help you gain it; if you admire beauty, wisdom makes you beautiful not only in appearance but also inner beauty.

error: by
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to fixed collocation rules, to express "overcome...by means of" one should use 『overcome it with』 not 〈overcome it by〉. The preposition 〈by〉 is changed to 『with』 to conform to idiomatic expression, to correctly express the meaning "overcome problems with wisdom".

error_sentence: If you have no money,you can earn it by wisdom;if you are confused in life,you can overcome it by your wisdom but not abstract truth;if you desire power,wisdom can help gain it;if you admire beauty,wisdom makes you beautiful not only apperance but also inner.

correct_sentence: If you have no money, you can earn it by wisdom; if you are confused in life, you can overcome it with your wisdom but not abstract truth; if you desire power, wisdom can help you gain it; if you admire beauty, wisdom makes you beautiful not only in appearance but also inner beauty.

error: truth;if
correction: truth; if
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English punctuation usage rules, a space must be kept between the semicolon 〈truth;if〉 and the subsequent word 〈if〉. A space should be added to form the standard format 『truth; if』.

error_sentence: If you have no money,you can earn it by wisdom;if you are confused in life,you can overcome it by your wisdom but not abstract truth;if you desire power,wisdom can help gain it;if you admire beauty,wisdom makes you beautiful not only apperance but also inner.

correct_sentence: If you have no money, you can earn it by wisdom; if you are confused in life, you can overcome it with your wisdom but not abstract truth; if you desire power, wisdom can help you gain it; if you admire beauty, wisdom makes you beautiful not only in appearance but also inner beauty.

error: gain it;if
correction: you gain it; if
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to transitive verb usage, the phrase 〈help gain it〉 lacks a clear object. Add the pronoun 『you』 to form the complete structure 『help you gain it』, making the performer of the action clear; ② Space Error: According to English punctuation usage rules, a space must be kept between the semicolon 〈gain it;if〉 and the subsequent word 〈if〉. A space should be added to form the standard format 『gain it; if』.

error_sentence: If you have no money,you can earn it by wisdom;if you are confused in life,you can overcome it by your wisdom but not abstract truth;if you desire power,wisdom can help gain it;if you admire beauty,wisdom makes you beautiful not only apperance but also inner.

correct_sentence: If you have no money, you can earn it by wisdom; if you are confused in life, you can overcome it with your wisdom but not abstract truth; if you desire power, wisdom can help you gain it; if you admire beauty, wisdom makes you beautiful not only in appearance but also inner beauty.

error: apperance
correction: in appearance
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to comparative structure rules, the structure 〈not only...but also...〉 requires the complete prepositional phrase 『in appearance』. Therefore, the missing preposition 『in』 is added to mean "not only in terms of...", forming the correct expression 『not only in appearance』; ② Spelling Error: According to English spelling rules, to express "appearance" here, it is clear that 〈apperance〉 is a misspelling; the correct spelling should be 『appearance』.

error_sentence: If you have no money,you can earn it by wisdom;if you are confused in life,you can overcome it by your wisdom but not abstract truth;if you desire power,wisdom can help gain it;if you admire beauty,wisdom makes you beautiful not only apperance but also inner.

correct_sentence: If you have no money, you can earn it by wisdom; if you are confused in life, you can overcome it with your wisdom but not abstract truth; if you desire power, wisdom can help you gain it; if you admire beauty, wisdom makes you beautiful not only in appearance but also inner beauty.

correction: beauty
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: According to the requirement for completeness in comparative structures, the adjective 〈inner〉 should modify a specific noun, so the noun 『beauty』 needs to be added after it to form 『inner beauty』, making the object of comparison with 『appearance』 complete and clear.

error_sentence: Second,why wisdom is more powerful?The reason it what?How it works?Take city construction as an example,large amount of money is necessary,but how to make full use of it without wasting needs big wisdom.
correct_sentence: Second, why is wisdom more powerful? What is the reason? How does it work? Take city construction as an example.
error: wisdom is more powerful?The reason it what?How it works?Take
correction: is wisdom more powerful? What is the reason? How does it work? Take
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to English interrogative sentence formation rules, the original sentence should follow the "special interrogative word + linking verb + subject + predicative" structure; therefore, 〈wisdom is more powerful?The reason it what?How it works?〉 has a confused structure. The declarative word order should be changed to interrogative word order, i.e., 『why is wisdom more powerful?』, the complete interrogative structure 『What is the reason?』 should be supplemented, and an auxiliary verb should be added to form the complete interrogative sentence 『How does it work?』; ② Space Error: According to English punctuation rules, a space must be kept between a question mark 〈?〉 and the subsequent word. Ensure that a standard space is added after each modified question, i.e., the correctly standardized sentence after modification is 『why is wisdom more powerful? What is the reason? How does it work? Take』.

error_sentence: Second,why wisdom is more powerful?The reason it what?How it works?Take city construction as an example,large amount of money is necessary,but how to make full use of it without wasting needs big wisdom.
correct_sentence: Take city construction as an example. A large amount of money is necessary, but how to make full use of it without wasting it needs big wisdom.
error: ,
correction: . A
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English sentence separation rules, two complete sentences 〈Take city construction as an example,〉 and 〈large amount of money is necessary〉 need to be separated by a period. Change the comma to a period to form the correct sentence structure; ② Determiner Error: According to noun phrase structure rules, the indefinite article 『A』 must be added before 〈large amount of〉 to form the complete phrase 『A large amount of money』.

error_sentence: Second,why wisdom is more powerful?The reason it what?How it works?Take city construction as an example,large amount of money is necessary,but how to make full use of it without wasting needs big wisdom.
correct_sentence: A large amount of money is necessary, but how to make full use of it without wasting it needs big wisdom.
correction: it
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to transitive verb usage, 〈without wasting〉 as a transitive verb phrase must have an object. Add 『it』 to refer to the preceding 〈money〉, forming the complete structure 『without wasting it』.

error_sentence: In the 21th century,such magnificent wonders as The Oriental Pearl TV Tower are built to decorate our wonderful city,which are all thanks to wisdom.

correct_sentence: In the 21st century, such magnificent wonders as The Oriental Pearl TV Tower are built to decorate our wonderful city, which is all thanks to wisdom.
error: 21th
correction: 21st
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Contraction Error: According to English ordinal number abbreviation rules, the correct abbreviation for the ordinal of 21 is 『21st』 (twenty-first), not the incorrect 〈21th〉. Change to the standard abbreviated form.

error_sentence: In the 21th century,such magnificent wonders as The Oriental Pearl TV Tower are built to decorate our wonderful city,which are all thanks to wisdom.

correct_sentence: In the 21st century, such magnificent wonders as The Oriental Pearl TV Tower are built to decorate our wonderful city, which is all thanks to wisdom.
error: are
correction: is
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to relative clause rules, when the relative pronoun 〈which〉 refers to the singular noun 〈city〉, the predicate verb needs to be in the singular form. Change the plural verb 〈are〉 to the singular 『is』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: In the 21th century,such magnificent wonders as The Oriental Pearl TV Tower are built to decorate our wonderful city,which are all thanks to wisdom.
 In the final,wisdom exists in our mind.
correct_sentence: Finally, wisdom exists in our minds.
error: 
In the final
correction: Finally
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Adverb Error: According to transitional phrase usage, to express "finally" here, the transitional adverb 『Finally』 (capitalized) is generally used; 〈In the final〉 does not conform to English expression habits and is changed to the correct transitional structure 『Finally,』.

error_sentence: In the final,wisdom exists in our mind. Human is the highest level in animals and have the highest intelligence.
correct_sentence: Finally, wisdom exists in our minds. Humans are the highest level of animals and have the highest intelligence.
error: mind.Human is
correction: minds. Humans are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the principle of contextual semantic consistency, the noun 〈mind〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『minds』 to maintain consistency with the plural concept; ② Noun Number Error: 〈human〉, referring to the human species, should be changed to the plural form 『Humans』 to correctly generalize this biological category; ③ Space Error: According to English punctuation usage rules, a space must be kept between a period 〈.〉 and the subsequent word. Change the incorrect 〈mind.Human is〉 to the correct 『minds. Humans are』 format; ④ Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the principle of subject-verb agreement, the plural subject 〈Humans〉 must be paired with a plural linking verb. Therefore, the singular form 〈is〉 is changed to the plural form 『are』, forming the correct subject-verb structure 『Humans are』.

error_sentence: Human is the highest level in animals and have the highest intelligence.
correct_sentence: Humans are the highest level of animals and have the highest intelligence.
error: in
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, to express "the highest level of..." the structure 『the highest level of』 should be used. Change the preposition 〈in〉 to 『of』, forming the standard expression 『the highest level of animals』.

error_sentence: If we stimulate our wisdom at the bottom of our heart,one by one miracles will be created in the near future!
correct_sentence: If we stimulate our wisdom at the bottom of our hearts, one by one miracles will be created in the near future!
error: heart
correction: hearts
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the principle of pronoun-noun agreement, the plural possessive pronoun 〈our〉 generally modifies a plural noun. Therefore, the singular noun 〈heart〉 is changed to the plural form 『hearts』, forming the correct collocation 『our hearts』.