Writing prompt: My Ideal

Student essay:
Ideal is a splendid dream .It can lead you to success and make your deam come true.Now I'd like to share the ideal jobs of our group members with all of you.
You know,Li hua is a smart one in class.He never wears anything in the way out.Naturely,he wants to play a role of fashion designer.As everybody knows,he is senior to draw.He dreams of creating wonderful decorations with which you can be a shining star.
Chang Lili thought she may be a gardener.Sh is an out-going girl as we all love.She love plants,especially the lively and beautiful ones.Chang eagers to approach nature where is the original of the life and soal.So she wants to make the citg a better place just like nature.
Ma kai is fond of writing.As a result,he plans to be a writer,in which way he can share briliant story with others.Sun jun likes to cook green food.It's hard to be a good cooker,nonetheless that's what he like and the most important part in his life.
My dream is to become a film maker.Life is hard and cold while happy and relaxing.Flim is somthing we hunger for or we want to tell people.Dreams are awful,exciting and awesome.I wish I would share my life and dream with you.
Whatever is your dream,just embrace the present and dream your future.Remember:Everything is awesome.

Corrected essay:
The ideal is a splendid dream. It can lead you to success and make your dream come true. Now I'd like to share the ideal jobs of our group members with all of you.
You know, Li Hua is a smart one in class. He never wears anything on the way out. Naturally, he wants to play a role of a fashion designer. As everybody knows, he is skilled at drawing. He dreams of creating wonderful decorations with which he can be a shining star.
Chang Lili thinks she may be a gardener. She is an out-going girl as we all love. She loves plants, especially the lively and beautiful ones. Chang eagerly wants to approach nature, which is the origin of life and soul. So she wants to make the city a better place just like nature.
Ma Kai is fond of writing. As a result, he plans to be a writer, in which way he can share brilliant stories with others. Sun Jun likes to cook green food. It's hard to be a good cook. Nonetheless, that's what he likes and the most important part of his life.
My dream is to become a film maker. Life is hard and cold while happy and relaxing. The film is something we hunger for or we want to tell people. Dreams are awful, exciting, and awesome. I wish I could share my life and dream with you.
Whatever your dream is, just embrace the present and dream of your future. Remember: Everything is awesome.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Ideal is a splendid dream .It can lead you to success and make your deam come true.
correct_sentence: The ideal is a splendid dream.
error: Ideal
correction: The ideal
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when the abstract noun 〈Ideal〉 represents a specific concept, a determiner is needed for specific reference, so the definite article 『The』 should be added at the beginning of the sentence to form 『The ideal』 to conform to the usage norms of English abstract nouns.

error_sentence: Ideal is a splendid dream .It can lead you to success and make your deam come true.
correct_sentence: The ideal is a splendid dream. It can lead you to success and make your dream come true.
error: .It
correction: . It
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, appropriate spacing should be maintained between punctuation marks (such as periods) and the surrounding words. The original sentence 〈 .It〉 has two problems: first, there is a redundant space between the period and the preceding word, and second, there is no space after the period before the next word. Therefore, it is modified to 『. It』 to conform to standard format.

error_sentence: Ideal is a splendid dream .It can lead you to success and make your deam come true.
correct_sentence: It can lead you to success and make your dream come true.
error: deam
correction: dream
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary spelling rules, 〈deam〉 does not conform to the correct spelling form; its correct spelling should be 『dream』. Therefore, it is corrected to 『dream』 to express the meaning of 'dream', ensuring word accuracy.

error_sentence: You know,Li hua is a smart one in class.
correct_sentence: You know, Li Hua is a smart one in class.
error: hua
correction: Hua
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English proper noun writing rules, Chinese names in an English context should be capitalized. Therefore, 〈hua〉 is modified to the compliant 『Hua』 to correctly represent the person's name.

error_sentence: He never wears anything in the way out.
correct_sentence: He never wears anything on the way out.
error: in
correction: on
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, to express 'about to leave/disappear', the phrase 『on the way out』 should be used instead of 〈in the way out〉. Therefore, the preposition 〈in〉 is replaced with 『on』 to form the correct expression 『on the way out』.

error_sentence: Naturely,he wants to play a role of fashion designer.
correct_sentence: Naturally, he wants to play a role of a fashion designer.
error: Naturely
correction: Naturally
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English adverb formation rules, 〈Naturely〉 does not conform to the correct spelling form; its correct spelling should be 『Naturally』 to express the meaning 'naturally'. Therefore, it is corrected to 『Naturally』 to ensure word accuracy.

error_sentence: Naturely,he wants to play a role of fashion designer.
correct_sentence: Naturally, he wants to play a role of a fashion designer.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English countable noun singular usage rules, the countable noun 〈fashion designer〉 in the phrase 〈role of fashion designer〉 lacks a necessary determiner. The indefinite article 『a』 should be added to form 『a fashion designer』 to conform to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: As everybody knows,he is senior to draw.
correct_sentence: As everybody knows, he is skilled at drawing.
error: senior to draw
correction: skilled at drawing
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Adjective Error: According to English adjective phrase collocation rules, the phrase 〈senior to draw〉 does not conform to idiomatic expression; it should be changed to the adjective phrase 『skilled at drawing』 to accurately express the meaning 'skilled at drawing'; ② Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, to express 'skilled at a certain skill', the preposition 〈at〉 should be used instead of 〈to〉, so 〈to〉 is corrected to 『at』; ③ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English rules for verb forms after prepositions, the preposition 〈at〉 should be followed by a gerund form, so the base form verb 〈draw〉 is changed to the gerund 『drawing』, ultimately forming the correct expression 『skilled at drawing』.

error_sentence: He dreams of creating wonderful decorations with which you can be a shining star.

correct_sentence: He dreams of creating wonderful decorations with which he can be a shining star.

error: you
correction: he
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to the English principle of grammatical consistency, the pronoun 〈you〉 is inconsistent in person with the main clause subject 〈he〉, leading to referential confusion. It should be changed to the third-person singular pronoun 『he』 to maintain person agreement.

error_sentence: Chang Lili thought she may be a gardener.
correct_sentence: Chang Lili thinks she may be a gardener.
error: thought
correction: thinks
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the principle of contextual tense consistency, the main clause is in the simple present tense, while the subordinate clause verb 〈thought〉 is in the past tense. It should be changed to the present tense third-person singular form 『thinks』 to ensure tense matching.

error_sentence: Sh is an out-going girl as we all love.
correct_sentence: She is an out-going girl as we all love.
error: Sh
correction: She
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English personal pronoun spelling rules, 〈Sh〉 does not conform to the correct form; its complete and correct spelling should be 『She』 (capitalized), expressing the meaning 'she'. Therefore, it is corrected to 『She』 to ensure the pronoun's correctness.

error_sentence: She love plants,especially the lively and beautiful ones.
correct_sentence: She loves plants, especially the lively and beautiful ones.
error: love
correction: loves
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the third-person singular subject-verb agreement rule in English grammar, the subject 〈She〉 is a third-person singular, and the verb 〈love〉 needs to be in the singular form. Therefore, it is changed to 『loves』, forming the correct expression 『She loves』.

error_sentence: Chang eagers to approach nature where is the original of the life and soal.
correct_sentence: Chang eagerly wants to approach nature, which is the origin of life and soul.
error: eagers
correction: eagerly wants
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to English verb usage rules, 〈eagers〉 is an adjective and cannot directly be followed by the infinitive structure 〈to approach〉 to express willingness. It should be replaced with the adverb 『eagerly』 to modify the actual verb, forming the correct collocation 『eagerly wants』; ② Verb Choice Error: According to the original sentence and English grammar rules, this subject-verb-object structure lacks a true verb to express 'want'. The verb 'want' should be added, adhering to subject-verb agreement principles, and fully corrected to 『eagerly wants to approach nature』.

error_sentence: Chang eagers to approach nature where is the original of the life and soal.
correct_sentence: Chang eagerly wants to approach nature, which is the origin of life and soul.
error: where
correction: , which
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to the punctuation rules for English non-restrictive relative clauses, a comma needs to be added between the main clause and the relative pronoun 『which』 (『, which』) for separation, to clarify the supplementary function of the clause; ② Relative Word Error: According to the grammatical rules of English relative clauses, 〈where〉 as a relative adverb is only used to modify adverbials of place, whereas here the clause modifies the entire main clause concept (nature as the origin of life and soul). Therefore, the relative pronoun 『which』 should be used to introduce a non-restrictive relative clause.

error_sentence: Chang eagers to approach nature where is the original of the life and soal.
correct_sentence: Chang eagerly wants to approach nature, which is the origin of life and soul.
error: original of the
correction: origin of
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① PoS Confusion Error: According to English part-of-speech collocation rules, 〈original〉 is an adjective, meaning 'primitive; original', whereas a noun form is needed here to express the concept of 'origin'. Therefore, the adjective 〈original〉 is changed to the noun 『origin』 to ensure the part of speech matches the sentence meaning; ② Determiner Error: According to English abstract noun usage rules, when uncountable abstract nouns appear in parallel, the article 〈the〉 can be omitted in philosophical expressions to make the expression more concise and powerful. Therefore, the redundant 〈the〉 is deleted, finally corrected to: 『Chang eagerly wants to approach nature, which is the origin of the life and soul.』.

error_sentence: Chang eagers to approach nature where is the original of the life and soal.
correct_sentence: Chang eagerly wants to approach nature, which is the origin of life and soul.
error: soal
correction: soul
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary spelling rules, 〈soal〉 does not conform to the correct spelling form; its correct spelling should be 『soul』, meaning 'soul'. Therefore, it is corrected to 『soul』 to ensure word accuracy.

error_sentence: So she wants to make the citg a better place just like nature.

correct_sentence: So she wants to make the city a better place just like nature.

error: citg
correction: city
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary spelling rules, 〈citg〉 does not conform to the correct spelling form; its correct spelling should be 『city』. Therefore, it is corrected to 『city』 to express the meaning 'city', ensuring word accuracy.

error_sentence: Ma kai is fond of writing.
correct_sentence: Ma Kai is fond of writing.
error: kai
correction: Kai
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English proper noun writing conventions, Chinese names in an English context should be capitalized. Therefore, 〈kai〉 is modified to the compliant 『Kai』 to correctly represent the person's name.

error_sentence: As a result,he plans to be a writer,in which way he can share briliant story with others.
correct_sentence: As a result, he plans to be a writer, in which way he can share brilliant stories with others.
error: briliant story
correction: brilliant stories
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary spelling rules, 〈briliant〉 is misspelled; its correct form is 『brilliant』 with a double 'l'. Therefore, it is corrected to 『brilliant』 to express the meaning 'brilliant'; ② Noun Number Error: According to the implied plural meaning in the context, 〈story〉 as a countable noun needs to be in the plural form 『stories』 to match the semantics. Therefore, it is modified to 『stories』 to match the implied plural meaning.

error_sentence: Sun jun likes to cook green food.
correct_sentence: Sun Jun likes to cook green food.
error: jun
correction: Jun
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English proper noun writing conventions, Chinese names in English should be capitalized. Therefore, 〈jun〉 is modified to the compliant 『Jun』 to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: It's hard to be a good cooker,nonetheless that's what he like and the most important part in his life.

correct_sentence: It's hard to be a good cook. Nonetheless, that's what he likes and the most important part of his life.

error: cooker,nonetheless
correction: cook. Nonetheless,
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to English occupational title rules, 〈cooker〉 refers to a cooking appliance (utensil); to denote a professional chef, 『cook』 or 『chef』 should be used. Corrected to 『He works as a cook』; ② Punctuation Error: As can be seen from the original sentence, the 〈,〉 here is between two complete independent main clauses, but a 〈,〉 cannot separate or connect two main clauses. Therefore, 〈cooker,〉 needs to be changed to 『cook.』; ③ Punctuation Error: According to English syntactic conventions, when an adverb stands alone at the beginning of a sentence as a separate component, a 『,』 needs to be added after the adverb, changing it to 『Nonetheless,』 to separate the sentence and make the meaning clear.

error_sentence: It's hard to be a good cooker,nonetheless that's what he like and the most important part in his life.

correct_sentence: Nonetheless, that's what he likes and the most important part of his life.

error: like
correction: likes
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to the third-person singular rule, the subject 〈he〉 requires the singular form of the verb. Change 〈like〉 to 『likes』, forming the structure 『he likes』 to comply with subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: It's hard to be a good cooker,nonetheless that's what he like and the most important part in his life.

correct_sentence: Nonetheless, that's what he likes and the most important part of his life.

error: in
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to fixed collocation rules, to express a possessive relationship, 〈part of〉 should be used instead of 〈part in〉. The preposition 『in』 is replaced with 『of』 to correctly express the meaning 'part of...'. 

error_sentence: Flim is somthing we hunger for or we want to tell people.
correct_sentence: The film is something we hunger for or we want to tell people.
error: Flim is somthing
correction: The film is something
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to determiner usage customs, when specifically referring to a certain film, the abstract noun 〈film〉 requires a definite article, changed to 『The film』 to correctly indicate specific meaning; ② Spelling Error: According to English word spelling conventions, the incorrect noun 〈Flim〉 is correctly spelled as 『film』, meaning 'movie', and the indefinite pronoun 〈somthing〉 is correctly spelled as 『something』, meaning 'certain things'.

error_sentence: Dreams are awful,exciting and awesome.
correct_sentence: Dreams are awful, exciting, and awesome.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English rules for parallel adjectives, commas are needed to separate parallel adjectives. A comma is added after 〈exciting〉, forming the structure 『 exciting, and awesome.』 to make the sentence clearer and more fluent.

error_sentence: I wish I would share my life and dream with you.

correct_sentence: I wish I could share my life and dream with you.

error: would
correction: could
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to English subjunctive mood usage rules, in a subjunctive clause introduced by 〈wish〉, 『could』 should be used to express possibility or ability, not 〈would〉 which expresses willingness. Therefore, 〈would〉 is corrected to 『could』, fully modified to 『I wish I could share my life and dream with you.』 to conform to subjunctive mood grammatical norms.

error_sentence: Whatever is your dream,just embrace the present and dream your future.
correct_sentence: Whatever your dream is, just embrace the present and dream of your future.
error: is your dream
correction: your dream is
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Order Error: According to the basic structure rules of noun clauses, the subject 〈your dream〉 should precede the linking verb 〈is〉 to form normal word order. Therefore, the inverted structure is adjusted to the standard subject-verb-complement order 『your dream is』, making the sentence conform to the word order requirements of English declarative sentences.

error_sentence: Whatever is your dream,just embrace the present and dream your future.
correct_sentence: Whatever your dream is, just embrace the present and dream of your future.
correction: of
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation principles, the verb phrase 〈dream〉 when expressing 'to dream of something' must be paired with the preposition 『of』 to form the structure 〈dream of〉. Therefore, the missing preposition 『of』 is added to ensure the completeness and grammatical correctness of the phrase structure.