Writing prompt: A Brief Introduction to the UK

Student essay:
The United Kingdom is a magical country. People may wonder why different words are used to describe these 4 countries: England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland. In fact, first there was England. Wales was linked to it in the thirteenth century. Next England and Wales were joined to Scotland in the seventeenth century and later the name was changed to 'Great Britain'. Finally the English government tried in the early twentieth century to form the United Kingdom by getting Ireland connected in the peaceful way. Speaking of Britain,we all know that London is the capital. And there is one of my favorite stories happened in London in nineteenth century which named Holmes. I also like the TV series Sherlock Holmes. It's brilliant story and always made me fun. In short, Britain is a fantastic country. When you know more about it you will love it.

Corrected essay:
The United Kingdom is a magical country. People may wonder why different words are used to describe these 4 countries: England, Wales, Scotland, and Northern Ireland. In fact, first, there was England. Wales was linked to it in the thirteenth century. Next, England and Wales joined with Scotland in the seventeenth century, and later the name was changed to "Great Britain". Finally, the English government tried in the early twentieth century to form the United Kingdom by getting Ireland connected in a peaceful way. Speaking of Britain, we all know that London is the capital. And there is one of my favorite stories that happened in London in the nineteenth century, which is named Holmes. I also like the TV series Sherlock Holmes. It's a brilliant story and always makes me laugh. In short, Britain is a fantastic country. When you know more about it, you will love it.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: People may wonder why different words are used to describe these 4 countries: England, Wales, Scotland and Northern Ireland.
correct_sentence: People may wonder why different words are used to describe these 4 countries: England, Wales, Scotland, and Northern Ireland.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules for listing items (Oxford comma rule), a comma should be added before the last item when listing multiple items. Therefore, insert a comma between 〈Scotland〉 and 〈and Northern Ireland〉 to form the standard structure 『Scotland, and Northern Ireland』.

error_sentence: In fact, first there was England.
correct_sentence: In fact, first, there was England.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules for adverbial phrases, when the adverb 〈first〉 acts as a time adverbial in a sentence, it must be followed by a comma. Therefore, add a comma after 〈first〉 to achieve correct separation as 『first,』.

error_sentence: Next England and Wales were joined to Scotland in the seventeenth century and later the name was changed to 'Great Britain'.
correct_sentence: Next, England and Wales joined with Scotland in the seventeenth century, and later the name was changed to "Great Britain".
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules for time adverbials, the time adverb 〈Next〉 introducing a sentence must be followed by a comma. Therefore, add a comma after 〈Next〉 as 『Next,』 to maintain structural correctness.

error_sentence: Next England and Wales were joined to Scotland in the seventeenth century and later the name was changed to 'Great Britain'.
correct_sentence: Next, England and Wales joined with Scotland in the seventeenth century, and later the name was changed to "Great Britain".
error: were joined to
correction: joined with
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Voice Error: According to the voice conventions for narrating historical events, active voice should be used when actively describing historical processes. Therefore, the passive form 〈were joined〉 is changed to the active form 『joined』, which is more consistent with the characteristics of historical texts; ② Preposition Error: According to English expression norms for political entity union relationships, the preposition 『with』 should be used to indicate union between countries/regions. Therefore, 〈to〉 is corrected to 『with』 to accurately reflect an equal union relationship.

error_sentence: Next England and Wales were joined to Scotland in the seventeenth century and later the name was changed to 'Great Britain'.
correct_sentence: Next, England and Wales joined with Scotland in the seventeenth century, and later the name was changed to "Great Britain".
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules for compound sentences, when the conjunction 〈and〉 connects two independent clauses, it must be preceded by a comma. Therefore, add a comma after 〈century〉 as 『century, and later』 to achieve correct clause separation.

error_sentence: Next England and Wales were joined to Scotland in the seventeenth century and later the name was changed to 'Great Britain'.
correct_sentence: Next, England and Wales joined with Scotland in the seventeenth century, and later the name was changed to "Great Britain".
error: '
correction: "
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English proper noun quotation norms, the directly quoted political entity name 〈Great Britain〉 should be marked with double quotation marks 『"Great Britain"』. Therefore, change the single quotation marks to 『"Great Britain"』.

error_sentence: Next England and Wales were joined to Scotland in the seventeenth century and later the name was changed to 'Great Britain'.
correct_sentence: Next, England and Wales joined with Scotland in the seventeenth century, and later the name was changed to "Great Britain".
error: '
correction: "
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English proper noun quotation norms, the directly quoted political entity name 〈Great Britain〉 should be marked with double quotation marks 『"Great Britain"』. Therefore, change the single quotation marks to 『"Great Britain"』.

error_sentence: Finally the English government tried in the early twentieth century to form the United Kingdom by getting Ireland connected in the peaceful way.
correct_sentence: Finally, the English government tried in the early twentieth century to form the United Kingdom by getting Ireland connected in a peaceful way.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation rules for conclusive adverbs, when 〈Finally〉 introduces a concluding sentence, it must be followed by a comma. Therefore, adding a comma after 〈Finally〉 as 『Finally,』 meets grammatical requirements.

error_sentence: Finally the English government tried in the early twentieth century to form the United Kingdom by getting Ireland connected in the peaceful way.
correct_sentence: Finally, the English government tried in the early twentieth century to form the United Kingdom by getting Ireland connected in a peaceful way.
error: the
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English article usage rules, an indefinite article should be used for the first mention of a non-specific abstract concept 〈peaceful way〉. Therefore, change the definite article 〈the〉 to the indefinite article 『a』, with the complete form being 『in a peaceful way』.

error_sentence: And there is one of my favorite stories happened in London in nineteenth century which named Holmes.
correct_sentence: And there is one of my favorite stories that happened in London in the nineteenth century, which is named Holmes.
correction: that
error_type: Relative Word Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Relative Word Error: According to English relative clause rules, when the antecedent 〈stories〉 is modified by a superlative adjective, the relative pronoun 『that』 must be used to clearly introduce the clause and cannot be omitted. Therefore, add the missing relative pronoun 『that』 to clarify the clause structure.

error_sentence: And there is one of my favorite stories happened in London in nineteenth century which named Holmes.
correct_sentence: And there is one of my favorite stories that happened in London in the nineteenth century, which is named Holmes.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression norms for centuries, the century name 〈nineteenth century〉, as a specific time category, must be preceded by the definite article 『the』 to form the correct expression 『the nineteenth century』.

error_sentence: And there is one of my favorite stories happened in London in nineteenth century which named Holmes.
correct_sentence: And there is one of my favorite stories that happened in London in the nineteenth century, which is named Holmes.
error: which
correction: , which is
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to punctuation rules for non-restrictive relative clauses, a supplementary clause introduced by 〈which〉 must be separated from the main clause by a comma. Therefore, add a comma after the antecedent 〈century〉 as 『century, which...』 to achieve correct clause separation; ② Verb Voice Error: According to English naming expression norms, place naming must use the passive voice 『is named』. Therefore, change the active form 〈named〉 to 『is named』 to form a complete predicate structure.

error_sentence: It's brilliant story and always made me fun.
correct_sentence: It's a brilliant story and always makes me laugh.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English rules for singular countable nouns, the first mention of 〈brilliant story〉 requires the addition of the indefinite article 『a』 to form the standard expression 『a brilliant story』.

error_sentence: It's brilliant story and always made me fun.
correct_sentence: It's a brilliant story and always makes me laugh.
error: made me fun
correction: makes me laugh
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the present tense requirement of the context, change the past tense 〈made〉 to the present tense 『makes』 to maintain tense consistency and accurately reflect the work's ongoing impact; ② Verb Choice Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, "to make someone laugh" should use the standard expression 『make someone laugh』. Therefore, change the incorrect collocation 〈made me fun〉 to 『makes me laugh』.

error_sentence: When you know more about it you will love it.
correct_sentence: When you know more about it, you will love it.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to punctuation rules for adverbial clauses, a time adverbial clause introduced by 〈When you know...〉 must be followed by a comma to separate it from the main clause. Therefore, insert a comma after 〈it〉 as 『When you know more about it,』 to achieve correct clause separation.