Writing prompt: My Free Time

Student essay:
My free time
Hello,i am james.I am 14 years old.I like playing basketball,reading books,watching TV and so on.In my free time,I like donging housework and playing games.I usually go hiking with my parents.We always have a good time. Sometiames,i play the piano and go fishing with my brothers. In my school free time.I often play games with my good friends.This is my free time.What about you?Can you tell me,please?

Corrected essay:
My free time
Hello, I am James. I am 14 years old. I like playing basketball, reading books, watching TV and so on. In my free time, I like doing housework and playing games. I usually go hiking with my parents. We always have a good time. Sometimes, I play the piano and go fishing with my brothers. In my school free time, I often play games with my good friends. This is my free time. What about yours? Can you tell me, please?

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My free time
Hello,i am james.
correct_sentence: My free time
Hello, I am James.
error: i am james
correction: I am James
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun 〈i〉 should always be capitalized as 『I』, therefore 〈i〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to writing conventions; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of proper nouns needs to be capitalized; 〈james〉 is a proper noun representing a name, therefore 〈james〉 needs to be changed to 『James』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: In my free time,I like donging housework and playing games.
correct_sentence: In my free time, I like doing housework and playing games.
error: donging
correction: doing
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is understood that the intention here is to express "doing housework", therefore 〈donging〉 is a misspelling of 『doing』, and 〈donging〉 needs to be changed to 『doing』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.

error_sentence: Sometiames,i play the piano and go fishing with my brothers.
correct_sentence: Sometimes, I play the piano and go fishing with my brothers.
error: Sometiames,i
correction: Sometimes, I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is understood that the intention here is to express "sometimes", therefore 〈Sometiames〉 is a misspelling of 『Sometimes』, and 〈Sometiames〉 needs to be changed to 『Sometimes』 to make the sentence meaning coherent; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, there needs to be a space between punctuation and words; the original sentence 〈Sometiames,i〉 lacks a space, therefore 〈Sometiames,i〉 needs to be changed to 『Sometimes, I』 to conform to writing conventions; ③ Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first-person pronoun 〈i〉 should always be capitalized as 『I』, therefore 〈i〉 is changed to 『I』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: In my school free time.
correct_sentence: In my school free time, I often play games with my good friends.
error: .
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English expression habits, the time adverbial 〈In my school free time〉 in the original sentence, as an independent component, needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma, therefore 〈.〉 needs to be changed to 『,』 to conform to English punctuation usage rules.

error_sentence: What about you?Can you tell me,please?
correct_sentence: What about yours? Can you tell me, please?
error: you?Can
correction: yours? Can
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express "your (free time)"; the 〈you〉 in the original sentence is in the wrong form and should be changed to the possessive pronoun 『yours』, therefore 〈you〉 is changed to 『yours』 to indicate possession and fit the context; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, there needs to be a space between punctuation and words; the original sentence 〈you?Can〉 lacks a space, therefore 〈you?Can〉 needs to be changed to 『yours? Can』 to conform to writing conventions.