Writing prompt: Honesty is the Best Policy

Student essay:
As we can see in the picture,a butcher has sold some meat to a woman who has paid a false 100-yuan.But the woman do not know the meat is watering.
In fact, if we are honest to others,they will be honest to us in return.In turn,they will lie to us.Also,if you are dishonest,it is impossible for you to gain other people's trust.Nobody will want to be friend or do business with you.As a result, you will have no chance to succeed and will die alone.
On the other hand,people will trust you and think highly of you.If you are honest, people will be willing to get alone with you and they will show more respect to you.And you will feel your life becomes easier and happier.
So,in any case,we should remember that honest is the Best Policy.

Corrected essay:
As we can see in the picture, a butcher has sold some meat to a woman who has paid with a false 100-yuan note. But the woman does not know the meat is watered.
In fact, if we are honest with others, they will be honest with us in return. In turn, they will not lie to us. Also, if you are dishonest, it is impossible for you to gain other people's trust. Nobody will want to be your friend or do business with you. As a result, you will have no chance to succeed and will die alone.
On the other hand, people will trust you and think highly of you. If you are honest, people will be willing to get along with you and they will show more respect to you. And you will feel your life becomes easier and happier.
So, in any case, we should remember that honesty is the Best Policy.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: As we can see in the picture,a butcher has sold some meat to a woman who has paid a false 100-yuan.
correct_sentence: As we can see in the picture, a butcher has sold some meat to a woman who has paid with a false 100-yuan note.
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the verb 〈paid〉 when paired with a payment method requires the preposition 『with』 to connect to the specific payment instrument, therefore add 『with』 to form the standard expression 『paid with a false 100-yuan note』.

error_sentence: As we can see in the picture,a butcher has sold some meat to a woman who has paid a false 100-yuan.
correct_sentence: As we can see in the picture, a butcher has sold some meat to a woman who has paid with a false 100-yuan note.
correction: note
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to the context, 〈100-yuan〉 as an adjective needs to be followed by a specific noun to indicate the item category, therefore add 『note』 to form the complete expression 『100-yuan note』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: But the woman do not know the meat is watering.

correct_sentence: But the woman does not know the meat is watered.

error: do
correction: does
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence has a subject-verb agreement error; the subject 〈the woman〉 is third-person singular, and the original verb 〈do〉 is in the third-person plural form, therefore the verb 〈do〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『does』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: But the woman do not know the meat is watering.

correct_sentence: But the woman does not know the meat is watered.

error: watering
correction: watered
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Voice Error: According to the context, the meaning here is “being watered (by someone)”, so the passive voice should be used; the original word 〈watering〉 is a present participle indicating active voice, therefore 〈watering〉 needs to be changed to 『watered』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: In fact, if we are honest to others,they will be honest to us in return.
correct_sentence: In fact, if we are honest with others, they will be honest with us in return.
error: to
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the adjective 〈honest〉 when paired with an object requires the fixed preposition 『with』, therefore change 〈honest to others〉 to 『honest with others』 to conform to expression habits.

error_sentence: In fact, if we are honest to others,they will be honest to us in return.
correct_sentence: In fact, if we are honest with others, they will be honest with us in return.
error: to
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the adjective 〈honest〉 when paired with an object requires the fixed preposition 『with』, therefore change 〈honest to〉 to 『honest with』 to conform to expression habits.

error_sentence: In turn,they will lie to us.
correct_sentence: In turn, they will not lie to us.
correction: not
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to the context, the preceding text says “honesty will be reciprocated with honesty,” but the following text states “they will lie to us,” therefore the negative word 『not』 needs to be added to make the meaning consistent with the contextual logic.

error_sentence: Nobody will want to be friend or do business with you.
correct_sentence: Nobody will want to be your friend or do business with you.
correction: your
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the word 〈friend〉 in the original sentence lacks a necessary determiner to specify the object, therefore 『my』 needs to be added before 〈friend〉 to clarify the possessive relationship.

error_sentence: If you are honest, people will be willing to get alone with you and they will show more respect to you.
correct_sentence: If you are honest, people will be willing to get along with you and they will show more respect to you.
error: alone
correction: along
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express “get along”, therefore 〈alone〉 is a misspelling of 『along』, and 〈alone〉 needs to be changed to 『along』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.

error_sentence: So,in any case,we should remember that honest is the Best Policy.
correct_sentence: So, in any case, we should remember that honesty is the Best Policy.
error: honest
correction: honesty
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: According to the context, 〈honest〉 is an adjective, while a noun is needed here as the subject, therefore 〈honest〉 needs to be changed to 『honesty』 to fit the context.