Writing prompt: The Disadvantages and Advantages of Phones

Student essay:
Nowdays mobile phones are very common around us and especially used widly among students as it is convenience for us to contact with our parents.Besides,much fun is brought by it in order to make us excited and ralexed.The advantages of it attract teenagers to use .
In the other word,some teachers and parents have oppsite opinions because they think that using mobile phone is the most important reason which affects students' learning.For example, using mobile phones on class interferes teachers to teach and disperse students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledges that teachers mentioned.Meanwhile,the cheating softwares preseted on mobile phones like Wechat costs not only money but also time.It has bad influence on students' study.
In my opinion ,with the development of tecnology and transport ,mobile phones are supposed to usd by students for having so many advantages. However, as students,we should concentrate on study instead of ueing mobile phones.If we use it in the right way,parents will consideration us as well.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays mobile phones are very common around us and are especially used widely among students as they are convenient for us to contact our parents. Besides, they bring a lot of fun to us in order to make us excited and relaxed. The advantages of them attract teenagers to use them.
In other words, some teachers and parents have opposite opinions because they think that using mobile phones is the most important factor that affects students' learning. For example, using mobile phones in class interferes with teachers' teaching and disperses students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledge that teachers mentioned. Meanwhile, the chatting software present on mobile phones like WeChat costs not only money but also time. It has a bad influence on students' study.
In my opinion, with the development of technology and transport, mobile phones are supposed to be used by students for having so many advantages. However, as students, we should concentrate on study instead of using mobile phones. If we use them in the right way, parents will consider us as well.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Nowdays mobile phones are very common around us and especially used widly among students as it is convenience for us to contact with our parents.
correct_sentence: Nowadays mobile phones are very common around us and are especially used widely among students as they are convenient for us to contact our parents.
error: Nowdays
correction: Nowadays
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “nowadays”, so 〈Nowdays〉 is a misspelling of 『Nowadays』, and 〈Nowdays〉 needs to be changed to 『Nowadays』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: Nowdays mobile phones are very common around us and especially used widly among students as it is convenience for us to contact with our parents.
correct_sentence: Nowadays mobile phones are very common around us and are especially used widely among students as they are convenient for us to contact our parents.
correction: are
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Voice Error: The auxiliary verb 『are』 is missing here to form the passive voice 『are especially used』, so 『are』 is added before 〈especially〉 to maintain the grammatical integrity of the sentence.

error_sentence: Nowdays mobile phones are very common around us and especially used widly among students as it is convenience for us to contact with our parents.
correct_sentence: Nowadays mobile phones are very common around us and are especially used widely among students as they are convenient for us to contact our parents.
error: widly
correction: widely
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “widely”, so 〈widly〉 is a misspelling of 『widely』, and 〈widly〉 needs to be changed to 『widely』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: Nowdays mobile phones are very common around us and especially used widly among students as it is convenience for us to contact with our parents.
correct_sentence: Nowadays mobile phones are very common around us and are especially used widely among students as they are convenient for us to contact our parents.
error: it is convenience
correction: they are convenient
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: The preceding subject 〈mobile phones〉 is plural and needs to be referred to by the pronoun 『they』, so 〈it is〉 is changed to 『they are』 to conform to grammatical rules; ② PoS Confusion Error: 〈convenience〉 is a noun, but an adjective is needed here as a predicative, so 〈convenience〉 is changed to 『convenient』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Nowdays mobile phones are very common around us and especially used widly among students as it is convenience for us to contact with our parents.
correct_sentence: Nowadays mobile phones are very common around us and are especially used widely among students as they are convenient for us to contact our parents.
error: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Preposition Error: The verb 〈contact〉 is a transitive verb and can be directly followed by the object 〈our parents〉 without the preposition 〈with〉, so 〈with〉 is deleted to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Besides,much fun is brought by it in order to make us excited and ralexed.
correct_sentence: Besides, they bring a lot of fun to us in order to make us excited and relaxed.
error: much fun is brought by it
correction: they bring a lot of fun to us
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence has confused logic and unclear semantics. Combined with the context, it is known that this place wants to express “they bring a lot of fun to us”, so 〈much fun is brought by it〉 is changed to 『they bring a lot of fun to us』 to conform to grammatical rules and make the semantics clearer.

error_sentence: Besides,much fun is brought by it in order to make us excited and ralexed.
correct_sentence: Besides, they bring a lot of fun to us in order to make us excited and relaxed.
error: ralexed
correction: relaxed
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “relaxed”, so 〈ralexed〉 is a misspelling of 『relaxed』, and 〈ralexed〉 needs to be changed to 『relaxed』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: The advantages of it attract teenagers to use .

correct_sentence: The advantages of them attract teenagers to use them.

error: it
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The preceding subject is the plural 〈advantages〉, which needs to be referred to by the plural pronoun 『them』, so 〈it〉 is changed to 『them』 to be consistent with the plural noun 〈advantages〉.

error_sentence: The advantages of it attract teenagers to use .

correct_sentence: The advantages of them attract teenagers to use them.

correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: An object needs to be added after the verb 〈use〉. According to the preceding text, the plural pronoun 『them』 should be added here to refer to 〈mobile phones〉, so 『them』 is added after 〈use〉 to make the semantics complete.

error_sentence: In the other word,some teachers and parents have oppsite opinions because they think that using mobile phone is the most important reason which affects students' learning.
correct_sentence: In other words, some teachers and parents have opposite opinions because they think that using mobile phones is the most important factor that affects students' learning.
error: the other word
correction: other words
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 〈In the other word〉 is not an idiomatic expression; the correct fixed phrase is 『In other words』, so 〈the other word〉 is changed to 『other words』.

error_sentence: In the other word,some teachers and parents have oppsite opinions because they think that using mobile phone is the most important reason which affects students' learning.
correct_sentence: In other words, some teachers and parents have opposite opinions because they think that using mobile phones is the most important factor that affects students' learning.
error: oppsite
correction: opposite
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “opposite”, so 〈oppsite〉 is a misspelling of 『opposite』, and 〈oppsite〉 needs to be changed to 『opposite』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: In the other word,some teachers and parents have oppsite opinions because they think that using mobile phone is the most important reason which affects students' learning.
correct_sentence: In other words, some teachers and parents have opposite opinions because they think that using mobile phones is the most important factor that affects students' learning.
error: phone
correction: phones
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: Combined with the context, it is known that 〈mobile phone〉 needs to be in plural form to match the plural context of the surrounding text, so 〈phone〉 is changed to 『phones』 to be consistent with the context.

error_sentence: In the other word,some teachers and parents have oppsite opinions because they think that using mobile phone is the most important reason which affects students' learning.
correct_sentence: In other words, some teachers and parents have opposite opinions because they think that using mobile phones is the most important factor that affects students' learning.
error: reason which
correction: factor that
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Error: Combined with the context, it is known that this place wants to express “because they think that using mobile phones is the most important factor that affects students' learning”. 〈reason〉 means “reason”, which does not fit the context; 『factor』 is more accurate, so 〈reason〉 is changed to 『factor』 to more appropriately express the contextual meaning.

error_sentence: For example, using mobile phones on class interferes teachers to teach and disperse students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledges that teachers mentioned.
correct_sentence: For example, using mobile phones in class interferes with teachers' teaching and disperses students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledge that teachers mentioned.
error: on
correction: in
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The fixed phrase 『in class』 means “in the classroom”, so 〈on〉 is changed to 『in』 to more appropriately express the semantics.

error_sentence: For example, using mobile phones on class interferes teachers to teach and disperse students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledges that teachers mentioned.
correct_sentence: For example, using mobile phones in class interferes with teachers' teaching and disperses students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledge that teachers mentioned.
error: teachers to teach and disperse
correction: with teachers' teaching and disperses
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: The verb 〈interferes〉 needs to be paired with 『with』; 〈interferes teachers to teach〉 is an incorrect expression. Combined with the context, it is known that this place wants to express “using mobile phones in class interferes with teachers' teaching and disperses students' attention”, so 〈teachers to teach〉 is changed to 『with teachers' teaching』 to more appropriately express the semantics; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈using mobile phones〉 is a gerund phrase, treated as a single concept, so the predicate verb needs to be in the singular form, thus 〈disperse〉 is changed to 『disperses』 to conform to subject-verb agreement rules.

error_sentence: For example, using mobile phones on class interferes teachers to teach and disperse students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledges that teachers mentioned.
correct_sentence: For example, using mobile phones in class interferes with teachers' teaching and disperses students' attention so that they can't remember all the knowledge that teachers mentioned.
error: knowledges
correction: knowledge
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: 『knowledge』 is an uncountable noun and needs to be in singular form, so 〈knowledges〉 is changed to 『knowledge』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Meanwhile,the cheating softwares preseted on mobile phones like Wechat costs not only money but also time.
correct_sentence: Meanwhile, the chatting software present on mobile phones like WeChat costs not only money but also time.
error: cheating softwares preseted
correction: chatting software present
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: Combined with the context, it is known that this place wants to express “chatting software on mobile phones, such as WeChat, costs not only money but also time”, so 〈cheating〉 “deceiving” needs to be changed to 『chatting』 to fit the context; ② Noun Number Error: 『software』 “software” is an uncountable noun, so 〈softwares〉 needs to be changed to 『software』 to conform to uncountable noun rules; ③ Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “present on”, acting as a post-modifier, so 〈preseted〉 is a misspelling of 『present』, and 〈preseted〉 needs to be changed to 『present』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: Meanwhile,the cheating softwares preseted on mobile phones like Wechat costs not only money but also time.
correct_sentence: Meanwhile, the chatting software present on mobile phones like WeChat costs not only money but also time.
error: Wechat
correction: WeChat
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the correct spelling of the proper noun 〈Wechat〉 is 『WeChat』, so 〈Wechat〉 needs to be changed to 『WeChat』 to conform to conventions.

error_sentence: It has bad influence on students' study.

correct_sentence: It has a bad influence on students' study.

correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the countable noun 〈influence〉 needs to be preceded by the indefinite article 『a』 to indicate singular, so 『a』 is added before 〈bad〉 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: In my opinion ,with the development of tecnology and transport ,mobile phones are supposed to usd by students for having so many advantages.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, with the development of technology and transport, mobile phones are supposed to be used by students for having so many advantages.
error: tecnology
correction: technology
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “technology”, so 〈tecnology〉 is a misspelling of 『technology』, and 〈tecnology〉 needs to be changed to 『technology』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: In my opinion ,with the development of tecnology and transport ,mobile phones are supposed to usd by students for having so many advantages.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, with the development of technology and transport, mobile phones are supposed to be used by students for having so many advantages.
error: usd
correction: be used
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Verb Voice Error: The passive voice structure is incorrect here; 『be』 needs to be added to form the passive voice “be used”, so 『be』 is added before 〈usd〉 to conform to grammatical rules; ② Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “used”, so 〈usd〉 is a misspelling of 『used』, and 〈usd〉 needs to be changed to 『used』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: However, as students,we should concentrate on study instead of ueing mobile phones.
correct_sentence: However, as students, we should concentrate on study instead of using mobile phones.
error: ueing
correction: using
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that this place wants to express “using”, so 〈ueing〉 is a misspelling of 『using』, and 〈ueing〉 needs to be changed to 『using』 to make the sentence meaning smooth.

error_sentence: If we use it in the right way,parents will consideration us as well.
correct_sentence: If we use them in the right way, parents will consider us as well.
error: it
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: This refers to the previously mentioned plural 〈mobile phones〉, which requires the plural pronoun 『them』, so 〈it〉 is changed to 『them』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: If we use it in the right way,parents will consideration us as well.
correct_sentence: If we use them in the right way, parents will consider us as well.
error: consideration
correction: consider
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: PoS Confusion Error: 〈consideration〉 is a noun; here, after 〈will〉, the base form of the verb 『consider』 is needed, so 〈consideration〉 is changed to 『consider』 to conform to grammatical rules.