Writing prompt: Daming's Holiday Plan

Student essay:
Daming gets up and washes his face at half past eight.He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine,and he write his homework servious from nine to half past ten.He works hard,isn't he?From half past ten to half past eleven,Daming does exercise in the park.He has a delicious lunch at twelve o'clock,and he has IT classes or English classes from one to three o'clock.Daming reads many kinds of books from four to six o'clock.He has a bit of dinner at half past six.From seven to eight o'clock,Daming searches for information on the Internet or watches his favourite TV programs.Daming packs his things from half past eight to nine,and he goes tobed at half past nine.
Daming's holiday plan well,we should learn from him.

Corrected essay:
Daming gets up and washes his face at half past eight. He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine, and he writes his homework seriously from nine to half past ten. He works hard, doesn't he? From half past ten to half past eleven, Daming does exercise in the park. He has a delicious lunch at twelve o'clock, and he has IT classes or English classes from one to three o'clock. Daming reads many kinds of books from four to six o'clock. He has a bit of dinner at half past six. From seven to eight o'clock, Daming searches for information on the Internet or watches his favourite TV programs. Daming packs his things from half past eight to nine, and he goes to bed at half past nine.
Daming's holiday plan is well-organized. We should learn from him.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine,and he write his homework servious from nine to half past ten.
correct_sentence: He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine, and he writes his homework seriously from nine to half past ten.
error: write
correction: writes
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, there is a subject-verb agreement error in the original sentence. The subject 〈he〉 is third-person singular, and the original predicate 〈write〉 is in the third-person plural form; therefore, the verb 〈write〉 needs to be changed to the third-person singular form 『writes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine,and he write his homework servious from nine to half past ten.
correct_sentence: He eats a healthy breakfast at a quarter to nine, and he writes his homework seriously from nine to half past ten.
error: servious
correction: seriously
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning of the sentence, it is intended to express 'seriously' here; therefore, 〈servious〉 is a misspelling of 『seriously』, and 〈servious〉 needs to be changed to 『seriously』 to make the sentence coherent.

error_sentence: He works hard,isn't he?From
correct_sentence: He works hard, doesn't he? From half past ten to half past eleven, Daming does exercise in the park.
error: isn't he?From
correction: doesn't he? From
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Auxiliary Error: According to the context, the main verb 〈works〉 is a lexical verb, and the tag question requires the auxiliary verb 『does』; therefore, 〈isn't he〉 is changed to 『doesn't he』 to fit the context. ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is needed between punctuation and a word; the original sentence lacks a space in 〈he?From〉, so 〈he?From〉 needs to be changed to 『he? From』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: Daming packs his things from half past eight to nine,and he goes tobed at half past nine.

correct_sentence: Daming packs his things from half past eight to nine, and he goes to bed at half past nine.

error: tobed
correction: to bed
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space needs to be added between words; the original sentence lacks a necessary space in 〈tobed〉, so the run-on 〈tobed〉 is changed to 『to bed』 to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: Daming's holiday plan well,we should learn from him.
correct_sentence: Daming's holiday plan is well-organized. We should learn from him.
error: well,we
correction: is well-organized. We
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to the context, the sentence 〈Daming's holiday plan well〉 lacks a predicate verb, making the structure incomplete; therefore, 『is well-organized』 needs to be added to express the complete meaning. ② Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, two independent clauses need to be separated by a period to avoid a run-on sentence; in the original sentence, 〈Daming's holiday plan well〉 and 〈we should learn from him〉 are two main clauses, so 〈,we〉 is changed to 『. We』 to conform to grammar.