Writing prompt: Evacuation Drill

Student essay:
nowadays,there are many people died of fire disaster.if you encounter a fire disaster,what would do?today,i will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster.we should take evacuation drill.
the very important thing is to take an evacuation drill,and the aim is to improve our save you ability skill.and we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster take place .there also are many prablems .such as treat the drill as fun and think it is not important .the most important problem is the fear of the fire .
in my opponion ,first,we should keep calm and quiet.second,we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said.finily,we should keep ourseives safe.
now,if you encounter this condition,i hope you can remember my suggestion.

Corrected essay:
Nowadays, there are many people who have died from fire disasters. If you encounter a fire disaster, what would you do? Today, I will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster. We should take an evacuation drill.
The very important thing is to take an evacuation drill, and the aim is to improve our ability or skill to save ourselves. And we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster takes place. There are also many problems, such as treating the drill as fun and thinking it is not important. The most important problem is the fear of the fire.
In my opinion, first, we should keep calm and quiet. Second, we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said. Finally, we should keep ourselves safe.
Now, if you encounter this condition, I hope you can remember my suggestions.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: nowadays,there are many people died of fire disaster.if you encounter a fire disaster,what would do?today,i will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster.we should take evacuation drill.

correct_sentence: Nowadays, there are many people who have died from fire disasters.
error: nowadays
correction: Nowadays
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English sentence writing norms, the first letter of the first word of a sentence must be capitalized. Therefore, lowercase 〈nowadays〉 is corrected to capitalized 『Nowadays』 to ensure compliance with standard English format requirements.

error_sentence: nowadays,there are many people died of fire disaster.if you encounter a fire disaster,what would do?today,i will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster.we should take evacuation drill.

correct_sentence: Nowadays, there are many people who have died from fire disasters. If you encounter a fire disaster, what would you do?
error: died of fire disaster.if
correction: who have died from fire disasters. If
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Relative Word Error: According to English relative clause rules, the original sentence 〈there are many people died of〉 lacks a relative pronoun to introduce the relative clause; the relative pronoun 『who』 needs to be added to connect the main clause and the subordinate clause, changing it to 『there are many people who』 to conform to English clause structure norms; ② Verb Tense Error: According to the meaning of expressing the continuous state of having died up to the present, the original sentence's use of the simple past tense 〈died〉 cannot reflect the continuity of time; it should be changed to the present perfect tense 『have died』 to indicate an impact that occurred in the past and continues to the present; ③ Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, 〈died of〉 is usually used for internal causes such as illness or old age, while fire is an external event; therefore, 〈died of〉 needs to be changed to the more semantically appropriate 『died from』 to accurately express the cause of death; ④ Space Error: According to English writing norms, appropriate spacing should be maintained between sentences. The original sentence 〈fire disaster.if〉 lacks a space after the period; it should be adjusted to 『fire disasters. If』 to ensure correct punctuation usage; ⑤ Case Error: According to English grammar rules, the first letter of the first word of a sentence must be capitalized. The original word 〈if〉 is at the beginning of a sentence but not capitalized; it should be changed to 『If』 to conform to English capitalization norms.

error_sentence: nowadays,there are many people died of fire disaster.if you encounter a fire disaster,what would do?today,i will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster.we should take evacuation drill.

correct_sentence: If you encounter a fire disaster, what would you do? Today, I will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster.
error: do?today,i
correction: you do? Today, I
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: In the interrogative sentence 〈what would do〉, the subject performing the action is missing. According to English grammar rules, the second-person pronoun 『you』 needs to be added to form the complete interrogative sentence structure 『What would you do』, making the meaning clear; ② Space Error: According to English typesetting norms, a space should be kept after a question mark to enhance readability. Therefore, a space needs to be added after the question mark to ensure the sentence structure conforms to standard writing format; ③ Case Error: According to English writing rules, the first letter of the first word of a sentence 〈today〉 must be capitalized, so it is corrected to 『Today』; ④ Space Error: According to English typesetting norms, a space should be kept after a comma to enhance readability. Therefore, a space needs to be added after the comma to ensure the sentence structure conforms to standard writing format; ⑤ Case Error: In English, the first-person singular pronoun 〈i〉 should be capitalized in all situations, so it is changed to 『I』 to conform to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: nowadays,there are many people died of fire disaster.if you encounter a fire disaster,what would do?today,i will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster.we should take evacuation drill.

correct_sentence: Today, I will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster. We should take an evacuation drill.

error: disaster.we
correction: disaster. We
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing norms, a space must be kept after end-of-sentence punctuation. The original sentence 〈disaster.we〉 lacks a space after the period; it should be adjusted to 『disaster. we』 to conform to standard format; ② Case Error: According to English grammar rules, the first letter of the first word of a sentence must be capitalized. In the original sentence 〈disaster.we〉, 〈we〉 is at the beginning of a sentence but not capitalized; it should be corrected to 『disaster. We』 to conform to writing conventions.

error_sentence: nowadays,there are many people died of fire disaster.if you encounter a fire disaster,what would do?today,i will tell you something about how to escape the fire disaster.we should take evacuation drill.

correct_sentence: We should take an evacuation drill.

correction: an
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English article usage rules, the singular countable noun 〈evacuation drill〉 requires an indefinite article before it to indicate a general reference, so 『an』 is added to form 『an evacuation drill』 to meet grammatical requirements.

error_sentence: the very important thing is to take an evacuation drill,and the aim is to improve our save you ability skill.and we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster take place .there also are many prablems .such as treat the drill as fun and think it is not important .the most important problem is the fear of the fire .

correct_sentence: The very important thing is to take an evacuation drill, and the aim is to improve our ability or skill to save ourselves.
error: the
correction: The
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English sentence-initial capitalization rules, the sentence-initial 〈the〉 is changed to 『The』 to ensure capitalization norms.

error_sentence: the very important thing is to take an evacuation drill,and the aim is to improve our save you ability skill.and we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster take place .there also are many prablems .such as treat the drill as fun and think it is not important .the most important problem is the fear of the fire .

correct_sentence: The very important thing is to take an evacuation drill, and the aim is to improve our ability or skill to save ourselves. And we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster takes place.
error: save you ability skill.and
correction: ability or skill to save ourselves. And
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Order Error: According to English phrase structure rules, the word order in the original phrase 〈save you ability skill〉 is chaotic and the meaning is unclear; it should be adjusted to the logical 『ability or skill to save ourselves』 to make the expression clearer; ② Conjunction Error: According to English parallel structure rules, 〈ability skill〉 are two parallel nouns and need to be connected by the conjunction 『or』 to clearly express a choice relationship, changing it to 『ability or skill』; ③ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English infinitive usage, when 'improve' is followed by a purpose of action, 『to』 needs to be added; therefore, 〈improve our ability or skill save ourselves〉 is changed to 『improve our ability or skill to save ourselves』; ④ Pronoun Error: According to English pronoun consistency rules, the reflexive pronoun 〈ourselves〉 needs to be consistent with the subject 〈we〉; the original 〈you〉 would cause referential confusion and should be uniformly changed to 『our ability or skill to save ourselves』; ⑤ Space Error: According to English written expression norms, a word following a punctuation mark needs to have a space preserved with the punctuation mark; therefore, 〈.and〉 should be changed to 『. And』 to conform to English written expression norms; ⑥ Case Error: According to English sentence-initial capitalization rules, the sentence-initial 〈and〉 needs to be changed to the capitalized form 『And』 to ensure grammatical norms.

error_sentence: the very important thing is to take an evacuation drill,and the aim is to improve our save you ability skill.and we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster take place .there also are many prablems .such as treat the drill as fun and think it is not important .the most important problem is the fear of the fire .

correct_sentence: And we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster takes place. There are also many problems, such as treating the drill as fun and thinking it is not important.
error: take place .there also are many prablems .such as treat
correction: takes place. There are also many problems, such as treating
error_type: Word Order Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the subject 〈fire disaster〉 is in the third-person singular form, so the predicate verb needs to use the singular form 『takes』 to maintain subject-verb agreement, changing the plural verb 〈take〉 to 『takes』; ② Space Error: According to English written expression norms, no space is needed between a punctuation mark and the preceding word; therefore, 〈place .〉 should be changed to 『place.』 to conform to English written expression norms; ③ Space Error: According to English written expression norms, a word following a punctuation mark needs to have a space preserved with the punctuation mark; therefore, 〈.there〉 should be changed to 『. There』 to conform to English written expression norms; ④ Case Error: According to English writing norms, the first letter of the first word of a sentence must be capitalized; therefore, the lowercase form 〈there〉 is changed to the sentence-initial capitalized form 『There』; ⑤ Word Order Error: According to English sentence structure norms, when 'also' modifies a 'there be' structure, it should be placed after the 'be' verb; thus, 〈there also are〉 needs to be changed to 『There are also』; ⑥ Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary spelling rules and the meaning of the original sentence, it is clear that 'problems' is intended here; 〈prablems〉 is not the correct spelling and should be corrected to 『problems』 to ensure accurate word spelling; ⑦ Space Error: According to English written expression norms, no space is needed between a punctuation mark and the preceding word; therefore, 〈prablems .〉 should be changed to 『problems.』 to conform to English written expression norms; ⑧ Punctuation Error: According to English punctuation usage norms, when listing items, a comma is needed to connect the main clause and the exemplification part; therefore, a comma 『,』 should be added after 〈problems〉, changing it to 『, such as』; ⑨ Space Error: According to English writing format requirements, a space needs to be preserved after a comma with the following word, while no space is left before it. The original phrase 〈.such as treat〉 has a space error and should be adjusted to 『, such as』; ⑩ Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, the prepositional phrase 〈such as〉 should be followed by a gerund form; therefore, the base form verb 〈treat〉 in the original sentence is changed to the gerund form 『treating』, maintaining the integrity of the subsequent structure 『the drill as fun』.

error_sentence: the very important thing is to take an evacuation drill,and the aim is to improve our save you ability skill.and we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster take place .there also are many prablems .such as treat the drill as fun and think it is not important .the most important problem is the fear of the fire .

correct_sentence: There are also many problems, such as treating the drill as fun and thinking it is not important.
error: think
correction: thinking
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the English principle of parallel structure, components connected by the coordinating conjunction 〈and〉 must maintain consistent grammatical form. In the original phrase 〈treating... and think...〉, the first item is a gerund, so the latter item should be in the same form; therefore, the base form verb 〈think〉 is changed to the gerund 『thinking』 to maintain parallel structure.

error_sentence: the very important thing is to take an evacuation drill,and the aim is to improve our save you ability skill.and we should know how to escape the place where the fire disaster take place .there also are many prablems .such as treat the drill as fun and think it is not important .the most important problem is the fear of the fire .

correct_sentence: There are also many problems, such as treating the drill as fun and thinking it is not important. The most important problem is the fear of the fire.

error: .the
correction: . The
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English punctuation norms, a space should be preserved between a period and the following word; therefore, a space is added, changing the original to 『. The』; ② Case Error: According to English punctuation norms, the first letter of a new sentence after a period must be capitalized. The original word 〈the〉 is the first word of a sentence but not capitalized; it should be corrected to 『. The』 to conform to writing norms.

error_sentence: in my opponion ,first,we should keep calm and quiet.second,we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said.finily,we should keep ourseives safe.

correct_sentence: In my opinion, first, we should keep calm and quiet.
error: in my opponion
correction: In my opinion
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Case Error: According to English writing norms, the first letter of the first word of a sentence must be capitalized; therefore, the lowercase form 〈in〉 is changed to the sentence-initial capitalized form 『In』; ② Spelling Error: According to English vocabulary spelling rules, 〈opponion〉 is not spelled correctly and should be corrected to 『opinion』, meaning 'view' or 'idea'.

error_sentence: in my opponion ,first,we should keep calm and quiet.second,we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said.finily,we should keep ourseives safe.

correct_sentence: In my opinion, first, we should keep calm and quiet. Second, we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said.
error: quiet.second
correction: quiet. Second
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English punctuation norms, a space should be preserved between a period and the following word; therefore, a space is added, changing the original to 『quiet. Second』; ② Case Error: According to English punctuation norms, the first letter of a new sentence after a period must be capitalized. The original word 〈second〉 is the first word of a sentence but not capitalized; it should be corrected to 『quiet. Second』 to conform to writing norms.

error_sentence: in my opponion ,first,we should keep calm and quiet.second,we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said.finily,we should keep ourseives safe.

correct_sentence: Second, we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said. Finally, we should keep ourselves safe.

error: said.finily
correction: said. Finally
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English punctuation norms, a space should be preserved between a period and the following word; therefore, a space is added, changing the original to 『. Finally』; ② Case Error: According to English punctuation norms, the first letter of a new sentence after a period must be capitalized. 〈finily〉 is the first word of a sentence but not capitalized; it should be corrected to 『Finally』 to conform to writing norms; ③ Spelling Error: According to adverb formation rules, 〈finily〉 is not spelled correctly and should be corrected to 『Finally』, meaning 'at last'.

error_sentence: in my opponion ,first,we should keep calm and quiet.second,we should obey the suggestions that the teacher said.finily,we should keep ourseives safe.

correct_sentence: Finally, we should keep ourselves safe.

error: ourseives
correction: ourselves
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to reflexive pronoun formation rules, 〈ourseives〉 has an incorrect letter order and should be corrected to 『ourselves』, meaning 'we ourselves'.

error_sentence: now,if you encounter this condition,i hope you can remember my suggestion.
correct_sentence: Now, if you encounter this condition, I hope you can remember my suggestions.
error: now
correction: Now
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to sentence-initial capitalization rules, 〈now〉 is changed to the sentence-initial capitalized form 『Now』 to conform to English writing norms.

error_sentence: now,if you encounter this condition,i hope you can remember my suggestion.
correct_sentence: Now, if you encounter this condition, I hope you can remember my suggestions.
error: i
correction: I
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English grammar rules, the first-person singular pronoun must be capitalized in any position; 〈i〉 is corrected to 『I』 to conform to English writing rules.

error_sentence: now,if you encounter this condition,i hope you can remember my suggestion.
correct_sentence: Now, if you encounter this condition, I hope you can remember my suggestions.
error: suggestion
correction: suggestions
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to contextual semantic analysis, this refers to multiple suggestions rather than a single one; therefore, the singular noun 〈suggestion〉 is changed to the plural form 『suggestions』 to meet semantic requirements.