Writing prompt: Will E-book Be Necessary in the Future?

Student essay:
At the age of rapid development of science and technology ,various kinds of new technology have sprung up,including e-book. It is widely used in the word. Almost mobile phones are equipped with this function. But this leads to a problem:Is it beneficial to us?
As the saying goes:Every coin has two sides.On one hand, e-book makes our life easier.First,we just need to download the information into the mobile phone which is portable. We don't need to carry a thick book as before. Second, making paper needs amount of trees while using e-book saves natural resources. At the same time, it has large capability, we can store useful things in it in case of need.
On the other hand, e-book does harm for some teenagers. As every knows that some teenagers have preference for novels. No matter where they are or what they do, they are always reading novels. This bad behavior will affect their study and let them pay less attention on other things. What's more, it will has side effect on their eyes because of the radiation from the mobile phone.
From my point of view, although e-book becomes more crucial in our daily life, we should use it correctly, not excessively. After all, only the body is our own health which is the most valuable asset!

Corrected essay:
In the age of rapid development of science and technology, various kinds of new technology have sprung up, including e-books. They are widely used in the world. Almost all mobile phones are equipped with this function. But this leads to a problem. Is it beneficial to us?
As the saying goes, every coin has two sides. On one hand, e-books make our life easier. First, we just need to download the information onto the mobile phone, which is portable. We don't need to carry a thick book as before. Second, making paper needs a large amount of trees while using e-books saves natural resources. At the same time, it has a large capacity, so we can store useful things in it in case of need.
On the other hand, e-books do harm to some teenagers. As everyone knows, some teenagers have a preference for novels. No matter where they are or what they do, they are always reading novels. This bad behavior will affect their study and let them pay less attention to other things. What's more, it will have side effects on their eyes because of the radiation from the mobile phone.
From my point of view, although e-books become more crucial in our daily life, we should use them correctly, not excessively. After all, only our body and health are the most valuable assets!

Error analysis:
error_sentence: At the age of rapid development of science and technology ,various kinds of new technology have sprung up,including e-book.
correct_sentence: In the age of rapid development of science and technology, various kinds of new technology have sprung up, including e-books.
error: At
correction: In
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: In the original sentence, 〈At the age of〉 is used to indicate an age stage. However, the intention here is to express "in the age of rapid technological development"; according to English usage, the fixed phrase 『In the age of』 should be used. 〈At〉 should be changed to 『In』 to make the expression conform to semantic and grammatical requirements.

error_sentence: At the age of rapid development of science and technology ,various kinds of new technology have sprung up,including e-book. It is widely used in the word.
correct_sentence: In the age of rapid development of science and technology, various kinds of new technology have sprung up, including e-books. They are widely used in the world.
error: book. It is
correction: books. They are
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: The preceding text mentions “various kinds of new technology”, indicating more than one new technology, so 〈e-book〉 should be in the plural form 『e-books』 to be consistent with the contextual meaning; ② Pronoun Error: Since the noun changes to the plural form 『e-books』, the pronoun referring to it also needs to be in the plural form; in the original sentence, 〈It is〉 should be changed to 『They are』 to ensure agreement in number between the pronoun and the noun it refers to.

error_sentence: It is widely used in the word.
correct_sentence: They are widely used in the world.
error: word
correction: world
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention here is to express “world”, so 〈word〉 is a misspelling of 『world』; 〈word〉 needs to be changed to 『world』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.

error_sentence: Almost mobile phones are equipped with this function.
correct_sentence: Almost all mobile phones are equipped with this function.
correction: all
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: In English grammar rules, when 〈Almost〉 modifies a noun phrase, it usually needs to be paired with the determiner 『all』 to form “Almost all”, meaning “almost all”. The original sentence lacks the determiner 『all』, making the expression incomplete and inaccurate. Add 『all』 to form “Almost all mobile phones”, clearly referring to “almost all mobile phones”, which conforms to English usage.

error_sentence: But this leads to a problem:Is it beneficial to us?

correct_sentence: But this leads to a problem.
error: :
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, an independent interrogative sentence “Is it beneficial to us?” should not be directly connected to the preceding sentence with a colon 〈:〉. A colon is not suitable for introducing such an independent interrogative sentence; the colon should be changed to a period 『.』 to separate the preceding and following sentences into independent sentences, conforming to grammar rules and usage.

error_sentence: As the saying goes:Every coin has two sides.
correct_sentence: As the saying goes, every coin has two sides.
error: :Every
correction: , every
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: In English usage, when “As the saying goes” is followed by a direct quotation, a comma, not a colon, should be used for separation. The use of a colon 〈:〉 in the original sentence is incorrect and needs to be changed to a comma 『,』. After correcting the punctuation, 〈Every〉 is no longer at the beginning of a new sentence; according to sentence coherence rules, the initial letter should be changed to lowercase, i.e., change 〈Every〉 to 『every』.

error_sentence: On one hand, e-book makes our life easier.
correct_sentence: On one hand, e-books make our life easier.
error: book makes
correction: books make
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, this does not refer to a single e-book but to e-books as a category of things, so 〈e-book〉 should be changed to the plural form 『e-books』 to make the expression consistent with the meaning; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: When the subject changes to the plural form 『e-books』, according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb also needs to be in the plural form; in the original sentence, 〈makes〉 should be changed to 『make』 to ensure subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: First,we just need to download the information into the mobile phone which is portable.
correct_sentence: First, we just need to download the information onto the mobile phone, which is portable.
error: into
correction: onto
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English usage, when describing downloading information to the surface of a device (such as a mobile phone), “download” should be paired with the preposition 『onto』. The use of 〈into〉 in the original sentence is an improper pairing with “download” and does not fit the context. Change 〈into〉 to 『onto』 so that “download the information onto the mobile phone” is expressed correctly and meets semantic requirements.

error_sentence: First,we just need to download the information into the mobile phone which is portable.
correct_sentence: First, we just need to download the information onto the mobile phone, which is portable.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, “which is portable” is a non-restrictive relative clause used to provide additional information about the antecedent “the mobile phone”. A non-restrictive relative clause needs to be separated from the main clause by a comma; the original sentence lacks a comma. A comma 『,』 should be added after 〈phone〉 to make the sentence structure clear and enhance readability.

error_sentence: Second, making paper needs amount of trees while using e-book saves natural resources.
correct_sentence: Second, making paper needs a large amount of trees while using e-books saves natural resources.
correction: a large
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the “amount of” structure, when expressing quantity, often requires a determiner for modification. In the original sentence, “amount of trees” is unclear in meaning and lacks a determiner. Add the determiner 『a large』 to form “a large amount of trees”, clearly expressing “a large number of trees”, making the sentence expression complete and accurate.

error_sentence: Second, making paper needs amount of trees while using e-book saves natural resources.
correct_sentence: Second, making paper needs a large amount of trees while using e-books saves natural resources.
error: book
correction: books
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the contextual meaning, this discusses the saving of natural resources by using e-books, not referring specifically to one e-book, but to e-books as a category. Therefore, 〈e-book〉 needs to be changed to the plural form 『e-books』 to be consistent with the plural logic in the preceding “making paper needs a large amount of trees”, ensuring the accuracy and coherence of the sentence expression.

error_sentence: At the same time, it has large capability, we can store useful things in it in case of need.

correct_sentence: At the same time, it has a large capacity, so we can store useful things in it in case of need.

error: large capability,
correction: a large capacity, so
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: “capacity” is a countable noun; here it means “a large capacity”. According to English grammar rules, an indefinite article 『a』 needs to be added before it, forming “a large capacity”; ② Noun Error: According to the sentence meaning, the intention is to express “large capacity”; 〈capability〉 means “ability”, which does not fit the context and should be changed to 『capacity』, which means “capacity”; ③ Conjunction Error: In the original sentence, “it has a large capacity” and “we can store useful things in it in case of need” are two independent subject-verb structures with a causal logical relationship. According to English usage, the conjunction 『so』 needs to be added to clearly indicate the logical connection between the preceding and following clauses.

error_sentence: On the other hand, e-book does harm for some teenagers.
correct_sentence: On the other hand, e-books do harm to some teenagers.
error: book does harm for
correction: books do harm to
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, this does not refer to a single e-book but to e-books in general, so 〈e-book〉 should be changed to the plural form 『e-books』 to make the expression more semantically appropriate; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: When the subject changes to the plural form 『e-books』, according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb can no longer use the third-person singular form 〈does〉 but needs to be paired with the base form of the verb 『do』 to ensure subject-verb agreement; ③ Preposition Error: “do harm to” is a fixed phrase meaning “to be harmful to...”; the use of 〈for〉 in the original sentence does not conform to this idiomatic usage and should be changed to 『to』.

error_sentence: As every knows that some teenagers have preference for novels.
correct_sentence: As everyone knows, some teenagers have a preference for novels.
error: every knows that
correction: everyone knows,
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈every〉 is a determiner and cannot stand alone as a subject; according to the sentence's intended meaning of “everyone knows”, it should be changed to the compound pronoun 『everyone』; ② Punctuation Error: “As everyone knows”, as a non-restrictive relative clause, serves to provide additional information in the sentence and needs to be separated from the following clause by a comma; the original sentence lacks a comma, and 『,』 should be added after 〈knows〉 to make the sentence structure clear; ③ Conjunction Error: The original phrase 〈As every knows that〉 has a double conjunction error; “as” here introduces an adverbial clause of manner, and the structure should be “As + subject + verb, main clause”, so the redundant conjunction 〈that〉 should be deleted.

error_sentence: As every knows that some teenagers have preference for novels.
correct_sentence: As everyone knows, some teenagers have a preference for novels.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, “have a preference for” is a fixed phrase meaning “to have a preference for...”. The original phrase 〈have preference for〉 lacks the indefinite article 『a』, making the expression not conform to grammatical norms. Add the indefinite article 『a』 to form “have a preference for”, making the sentence expression accurate and meeting semantic requirements.

error_sentence: This bad behavior will affect their study and let them pay less attention on other things.
correct_sentence: This bad behavior will affect their study and let them pay less attention to other things.
error: on
correction: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English usage, “pay attention to” is a fixed phrase meaning “to focus on; to notice”. The use of 〈on〉 with “pay attention” in the original sentence does not conform to this fixed usage. 〈on〉 should be changed to 『to』 so that “pay less attention to other things” conforms to grammar rules and usage.

error_sentence: What's more, it will has side effect on their eyes because of the radiation from the mobile phone.

correct_sentence: What's more, it will have side effects on their eyes because of the radiation from the mobile phone.

error: has side effect
correction: have side effects
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, the original sentence uses the simple future tense structure “will + base form of verb”; when the subject 〈it〉 is paired with a verb, the base form of the verb should be used. 〈has〉 is the third-person singular form of the verb and does not meet the future tense structure requirement; it should be changed to 『have』; ② Noun Number Error: Considering the context, the “side effects” mentioned here are more than one, so 〈side effect〉 should be in the plural form 『side effects』 to make the expression more accurate.

error_sentence: From my point of view, although e-book becomes more crucial in our daily life, we should use it correctly, not excessively.
correct_sentence: From my point of view, although e-books become more crucial in our daily life, we should use them correctly, not excessively.
error: book becomes
correction: books become
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Number Error: According to the context, this discusses e-books in general in daily life, not a single e-book, so 〈e-book〉 should be changed to the plural form 『e-books』 to make the expression semantically appropriate; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: When the subject changes to the plural form 『e-books』, according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb can no longer use the third-person singular form 〈becomes〉 but needs to be paired with the base form of the verb 『become』 to ensure subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: From my point of view, although e-book becomes more crucial in our daily life, we should use it correctly, not excessively.
correct_sentence: From my point of view, although e-books become more crucial in our daily life, we should use them correctly, not excessively.
error: it
correction: them
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, a pronoun needs to agree in number with the noun it refers to. In the original sentence, 〈it〉 refers to the plural noun 〈e-books〉, so 〈it〉 should be changed to the plural form 『them』 to ensure accurate reference and conform to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: After all, only the body is our own health which is the most valuable asset!
correct_sentence: After all, only our body and health are the most valuable assets!
error: the body is our own health which is
correction: our body and health are
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: According to logical semantics, the original sentence's equating of “body” and “health” is unreasonable; it should be changed to the parallel structure 『our body and health are』 to separately express the two concepts of body and health; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: “our body and our own health” is a plural subject; according to English grammar rules, the predicate verb cannot use the singular form 〈is〉 and should be changed to the plural form 『are』 to ensure subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: After all, only the body is our own health which is the most valuable asset!
correct_sentence: After all, only our body and health are the most valuable assets!
error: asset
correction: assets
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, the subject of the original sentence, “our body and our own health”, is a plural concept, indicating multiple aspects, and the predicate noun should also agree with it in number. Therefore, 〈asset〉 should be changed to the plural form 『assets』 to accurately express the meaning “body and health are the most valuable assets”.