Writing prompt: Discussion about Listening Test

Student essay:
The students of our school had a discussion about if the listening test in the National Matriculation English Test should be abandoned.The results are as follows.
The students who hold an idea of keeping the listening test think that listening is important.Listening is one of the four skills of language,so it cannot be ignored.We get information by means of listening and with the developing of international cooperation,the ability of listening and speaking needs improving.
However, other students are in favour of canceling the listening test.They find it unfair to have different quality of listening indifferent places.It's obivious that English teachers and language equipments are different between cities and countries.Not everyone has to communicate with foriegners face to face if we look further.

Corrected essay:
The students of our school had a discussion about if the listening test in the National Matriculation English Test should be abandoned. The results are as follows.
The students who hold an idea of keeping the listening test think that listening is important. Listening is one of the four skills of language, so it cannot be ignored. We get information by means of listening and with the development of international cooperation, the ability of listening and speaking needs improving.
However, other students are in favour of canceling the listening test. They find it unfair to have different qualities of listening in different places. It's obvious that English teachers and language equipment are different between cities and countries. Not everyone has to communicate with foreigners face to face if we look further.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: We get information by means of listening and with the developing of international cooperation,the ability of listening and speaking needs improving.

correct_sentence: We get information by means of listening and with the development of international cooperation, the ability of listening and speaking needs improving.

error: developing
correction: development
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: PoS Confusion: According to English grammar rules, 〈developing〉 is a noun, and here a noun is needed to collocate with 〈with〉, therefore 〈developing〉 in the original text needs to be changed to the noun 『development』 to conform to grammatical rules.

error_sentence: They find it unfair to have different quality of listening indifferent places.
correct_sentence: They find it unfair to have different qualities of listening in different places.
error: quality
correction: qualities
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈different〉 needs to be followed by a plural noun to mean “不同的”, in the original sentence 〈quality〉 should be in plural form, therefore 〈quality〉 should be changed to 『qualities』, to conform to English grammar rules.

error_sentence: They find it unfair to have different quality of listening indifferent places.
correct_sentence: They find it unfair to have different qualities of listening in different places.
error: indifferent
correction: in different
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space needs to be added between words, the original sentence 〈indifferent〉 lacks a necessary space, therefore the run-on 〈indifferent〉 is modified to 『in different』, to conform to English writing conventions.

error_sentence: It's obivious that English teachers and language equipments are different between cities and countries.
correct_sentence: It's obvious that English teachers and language equipment are different between cities and countries.
error: obivious
correction: obvious
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express “明显的”, therefore 〈obivious〉 is a misspelling of 『obvious』, it needs to be modified from 〈obivious〉 to 『obvious』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.

error_sentence: It's obivious that English teachers and language equipments are different between cities and countries.
correct_sentence: It's obvious that English teachers and language equipment are different between cities and countries.
error: equipments
correction: equipment
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English expression habits, 『equipment』 is an uncountable noun, meaning 设备, in the original sentence 〈equipments〉 mistakenly uses the plural form, therefore it needs to be changed to 『equipment』 to conform to semantics and expression habits.

error_sentence: Not everyone has to communicate with foriegners face to face if we look further.
correct_sentence: Not everyone has to communicate with foreigners face to face if we look further.
error: foriegners
correction: foreigners
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, it is known that the intention here is to express “外国人”, therefore 〈foriegners〉 is a misspelling of 『foreigners』, it needs to be modified from 〈foriegners〉 to 『foreigners』 to make the sentence meaning coherent.