Writing prompt: Pictures and Words in the News

Student essay:
Hello,everyone. Today I'm going to talk something about the pictures and words.
Nowadays,there are many ways to learn different kinds of news,for example,the old read newspaper and watch television news while young people using their computers and mobile phones to search messages they need. We can find both words and pictures there. Some people think that pictures are much better than words as they can give us impressive feelings more directly.
But from my point of view, words and the pictures are both very important parts during the period we get the latest news from the media. First of all, although pictures can tell us the whole scene,the words which are also needed can lead us to find more information through the pictures so that people like me who are always careless are able to learn more. What's more,the words are more subjective. It can tell you others' opinions that you cannot make up just from the pictures which are too objective. However,it doesn't mean that the pictures are less important than the words. While people are all very busy as they even don't have enough time to glance at the passages these days,pictures can tell things more quickly and easily. It also helps us to feel the words about it.
So let's pay more attention to both the words and the pictures in our daily life because they can give us different impressions. We can't live without words or pictures.

Corrected essay:
Hello, everyone. Today I'm going to talk something about the pictures and words.
Nowadays, there are many ways to learn different kinds of news, for example, the old read newspapers and watch television news while young people use their computers and mobile phones to search messages they need. We can find both words and pictures there. Some people think that pictures are much better than words as they can give us impressive feelings more directly.
But from my point of view, words and pictures are both very important parts during the period we get the latest news from the media. First of all, although pictures can tell us the whole scene, the words which are also needed can lead us to find more information through the pictures so that people like me who are always careless are able to learn more. What's more, the words are more subjective. They can tell you others' opinions that you cannot make up just from the pictures which are too objective. However, it doesn't mean that the pictures are less important than the words. While people are all very busy as they even don't have enough time to glance at the passages these days, pictures can tell things more quickly and easily. It also helps us to feel the words about it.
So let's pay more attention to both the words and the pictures in our daily life because they can give us different impressions. We can't live without words or pictures.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Nowadays,there are many ways to learn different kinds of news,for example,the old read newspaper and watch television news while young people using their computers and mobile phones to search messages they need.
correct_sentence: Nowadays, there are many ways to learn different kinds of news, for example, the old read newspapers and watch television news while young people use their computers and mobile phones to search messages they need.
error: newspaper
correction: newspapers
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to the context, 〈newspaper〉 in the original sentence should be in the plural form 『newspapers』 to indicate multiple newspapers; therefore, 〈newspaper〉 should be changed to 『newspapers』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: Nowadays,there are many ways to learn different kinds of news,for example,the old read newspaper and watch television news while young people using their computers and mobile phones to search messages they need.
correct_sentence: Nowadays, there are many ways to learn different kinds of news, for example, the old read newspapers and watch television news while young people use their computers and mobile phones to search messages they need.
error: using
correction: use
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar rules, there is a subject-verb agreement error in the original sentence; the subject 〈young people〉 is third-person plural, and the predicate 〈using〉 in the original sentence is a gerund, so the verb 〈using〉 needs to be changed to the third-person plural form 『use』 to maintain subject-verb agreement.

error_sentence: But from my point of view, words and the pictures are both very important parts during the period we get the latest news from the media.
correct_sentence: But from my point of view, words and pictures are both very important parts during the period we get the latest news from the media.
error: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 〈the〉 indicates specificity; 〈pictures〉 is a generic concept and does not require the definite article 〈the〉, therefore, 〈the pictures〉 in the original sentence is changed to 『pictures』 to comply with grammar rules.

error_sentence: It can tell you others' opinions that you cannot make up just from the pictures which are too objective.
correct_sentence: They can tell you others' opinions that you cannot make up just from the pictures which are too objective.
error: It
correction: They
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, a plural noun should use the pronoun 『They』; in the original sentence, 〈words〉 is a plural noun, and the subsequent pronoun should be in the plural form 『They』 to maintain number agreement, therefore, 〈It〉 needs to be changed to 『They』 to comply with English grammar.