Writing prompt: An Outdoor Activity

Student essay:
I'm the president of Students' Union.My name is H.This weekend,I will organize some students to take part in an outdoor activity.And I hope you could come.Studying at school laies more and more stress on us,so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relaxed ourself.We can also take exercise.Only to do exercise frequently can make ue strong.
The meeting time is 7:30 and we will get toghter at the school gate.It will start at 8:00 and come to an end at 11:00.What's more,it is GM Farm which is 2 kilometers away that we will go to.Planting vegetables and watering flowers are included in teh activity.
If you could come,I will appreciate it very much.

Corrected essay:
I'm president of the Students' Union. My name is H. This weekend, I will organize some students to take part in an outdoor activity. And I hope you can come. Studying at school puts more and more pressure on us, so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relax. We can also take exercise. Only by doing exercise frequently can we be made strong.
The meeting time is 7:30 a.m. and we will get together at the school gate. It will start at 8:00 a.m. and come to an end at 11:00 a.m. What's more, it is at GM Farm which is 2 kilometers away that we will go to. Planting vegetables and watering flowers are included in the activity. If you could come, I will appreciate it very much.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I'm the president of Students' Union.
correct_sentence: I'm president of the Students' Union.
error: the president of
correction: president of the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the job title 〈president〉 when used as a predicative usually does not take an article, so the incorrect determiner 『the』 is deleted. However, 『Students' Union』 as a specific organization name requires a definite article, thus it is adjusted to the correct expression 『president of the Students' Union』.

error_sentence: My name is H.This weekend,I will organize some students to take part in an outdoor activity.
correct_sentence: My name is H. This weekend, I will organize some students to take part in an outdoor activity.
error: H.This
correction: H. This
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is required after end-of-sentence punctuation (such as a period or comma), so the incorrect format 〈H.This〉 is corrected to 『H. This』.

error_sentence: And I hope you could come.
correct_sentence: And I hope you can come.
error: could
correction: can
error_type: Auxiliary Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Auxiliary Error: According to the sentence meaning, when expressing a current invitation, 〈can〉, indicating possibility, should be used instead of the hypothetical 〈could〉, so 〈could come〉 is changed to 『can come』 to make the tone more natural.

error_sentence: Studying at school laies more and more stress on us,so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relaxed ourself.
correct_sentence: Studying at school puts more and more pressure on us, so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relax.
error: laies
correction: puts
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Choice Error: The meaning here should be 'to exert pressure', the correct verb is 『puts』 not the incorrect verb 〈laies〉, the correct spelling is 『lays』 but it is still not applicable, so it is corrected to 『puts more and more pressure on us』, indicating the action of exerting pressure.

error_sentence: Studying at school laies more and more stress on us,so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relaxed ourself.
correct_sentence: Studying at school puts more and more pressure on us, so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relax.
error: stress
correction: pressure
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: The noun 〈stress〉 usually refers to psychological pressure, while 〈pressure〉 is more suitable for referring to the overall burden brought by studying, so 〈stress〉 is changed to the more accurate 『pressure』 to express the meaning more precisely.

error_sentence: Studying at school laies more and more stress on us,so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relaxed ourself.
correct_sentence: Studying at school puts more and more pressure on us, so an outdoor activity will help us get close to nature and relax.
error: relaxed ourself
correction: relax
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the principle of parallel structure, the verb 〈relaxed〉 needs to be changed to the infinitive 『relax』 to be consistent with the preceding 『get close to nature』, thus corrected to 『help us get close to nature and relax』; ② Pronoun Error: The pronoun 〈ourself〉 is a singular reflexive pronoun, which does not match the plural subject 〈us〉, so it is changed to the plural form 『ourselves』 to maintain number agreement.

error_sentence: Only to do exercise frequently can make ue strong.

correct_sentence: Only by doing exercise frequently can we be made strong.

error: to do
correction: by doing
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The phrase 〈Only to do〉 does not conform to grammatical rules and should be changed to 『Only by doing』 to express the method of 'by exercising frequently', thus corrected to 『Only by exercising frequently』.

error_sentence: Only to do exercise frequently can make ue strong.

correct_sentence: Only by doing exercise frequently can we be made strong.

error: make ue
correction: we be made
error_type: Verb Voice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English personal pronoun rules, 〈ue〉 is a spelling error; the correct form is the nominative pronoun 『we』 to meet the sentence subject requirement; ② Verb Voice Error: According to the English passive voice structure (be + past participle), 〈make ue〉 does not conform to grammatical rules and should be changed to 『we be made』 to correctly express the meaning of 'be made strong'; ③ Word Order Error: According to English inversion rules, sentences starting with 'Only by...' require partial inversion, so the original sentence is adjusted to 『Only by doing exercise frequently can we be made strong.』 to conform to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: The meeting time is 7:30 and we will get toghter at the school gate.
correct_sentence: The meeting time is 7:30 a.m.
correction: a.m.
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Contraction Error: According to English time writing conventions, 〈7:30〉 needs to be marked with a time unit to avoid ambiguity, so 『a.m.』 is added to clarify the time as morning, i.e., 『7:30 a.m.』.

error_sentence: The meeting time is 7:30 and we will get toghter at the school gate.
correct_sentence: and we will get together at the school gate.
error: toghter
correction: together
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: The word 〈toghter〉 is misspelled; the correct form is 『together』, expressing the concept of 'together', thus corrected to comply with word spelling rules.

error_sentence: It will start at 8:00 and come to an end at 11:00.What's more,it is GM Farm which is 2 kilometers away that we will go to.
correct_sentence: It will start at 8:00 a.m. and come to an end at 11:00 a.m.
correction: a.m.
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Contraction Error: According to English time writing conventions, 〈8:00〉 needs to be marked with a time unit to avoid ambiguity, so 『a.m.』 is added to clarify the time as morning, i.e., 『8:00 a.m.』.

error_sentence: It will start at 8:00 and come to an end at 11:00.What's more,it is GM Farm which is 2 kilometers away that we will go to.
correct_sentence: It will start at 8:00 a.m. and come to an end at 11:00 a.m. What's more, it is at GM Farm which is 2 kilometers away that we will go to.
error: 11:00.What
correction: 11:00 a.m. What
error_type: Contraction Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: ① Contraction Error: According to English time writing conventions, 〈11:00〉 needs to be marked with a time unit to avoid ambiguity, so 『a.m.』 is added to clarify the time as morning, i.e., 『11:00 a.m.』; ② Space Error: According to English writing conventions, a space is required after a period to separate sentences, so 〈11:00.What〉 is changed to 『11:00 a.m. What』, while also adding 『a.m.』 to clarify the time format.

error_sentence: It will start at 8:00 and come to an end at 11:00.What's more,it is GM Farm which is 2 kilometers away that we will go to.
correct_sentence: What's more, it is at GM Farm which is 2 kilometers away that we will go to.
correction: at
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English preposition usage rules, the preposition 『at』 needs to be added to introduce the specific location 〈GM Farm〉, thus changed to 『at GM Farm』 to conform to the grammatical structure.

error_sentence: Planting vegetables and watering flowers are included in teh activity.

correct_sentence: Planting vegetables and watering flowers are included in the activity.
error: teh
correction: the
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English article spelling rules, 〈teh〉 is a misspelling of the definite article 『the』 and should be corrected to ensure sentence correctness.

error_sentence: Planting vegetables and watering flowers are included in teh activity.

correct_sentence: Planting vegetables and watering flowers are included in the activity. If you could come, I will appreciate it very much.
error: 

error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Format Error: According to English paragraph conventions, the unnecessary line break character 〈\n〉 before 『If you could come, I will appreciate it very much.』 at the end of the text needs to be deleted to ensure text neatness and coherence.