Writing prompt: Film or Book, Which Do You Prefer?

Student essay:
Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful. In my opinion, I think read the original work it's the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing, by the way, if you prefer watching movies, maybe you will miss many interesting contants in the original work.

Corrected essay:
Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Games and The Lord of the Rings. It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work. However, if we read the original work, we can get more details, and the words in the books are graceful. In my opinion, reading the original work is the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing. By the way, if you prefer watching movies, you might miss many interesting details in the original work.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Games and The Lord of the Rings.
error: Game
correction: Games
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Number Error: The movie title 〈The Hunger Game〉 does not conform to the official naming; according to the standard name of this series, the plural form 『The Hunger Games』 should be used to maintain the accuracy of the proper noun.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Games and The Lord of the Rings.
error: Loard
correction: Lord
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English expression norms, 〈Loard〉 is misspelled; the correct spelling should be 『Lord』, meaning 'ring', which is an unalterable fixed part of the book title 'The Lord of the Rings'.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Games and The Lord of the Rings. It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work.
error: , it
correction: . It
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English expression norms, the original sentence 〈, it〉 uses a comma to connect two independent clauses, constituting a 'comma splice' error. It should be changed to a period 『. It』 to correctly separate the two complete sentences; ② Case Error: As the beginning of a new sentence, the first letter of 〈it〉 is not capitalized, violating the English rule of capitalizing the first letter of a sentence; it should be changed to 『It』 to conform to grammatical norms.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work.
error: serval
correction: several
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English expression norms, 〈serval〉 is a misspelling; based on the context, the adjective 『several』, indicating quantity and meaning 'a few', should be used.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work.
error: even
correction: so
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: 〈even that〉 does not fit the contextual logical relationship; according to the sentence's meaning, an adverbial of purpose needs to be expressed. It should be changed to the purposive conjunction 『so that』 (in order to), forming a complete adverbial clause of purpose structure.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work.
error: easier
correction: it more easily
error_type: PoS Confusion Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: According to English expression norms, the transitive verb 〈understand〉 lacks an object; 『it』 needs to be added to refer to the content mentioned earlier, forming a complete verb-object structure 『understand it』; ② PoS Confusion Error: 〈easier〉 is a comparative adjective and cannot directly modify the verb 〈understand〉. It should be changed to the adverbial phrase 『more easily』 to correctly modify the verb 〈understand〉, conforming to the 'verb + adverb' grammatical structure.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work.
correction: by
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: The comparative structure 〈than reading〉 is not symmetrical with the preceding 〈by watching〉; the preposition 『by』 needs to be added to form the parallel structure 『by reading』, maintaining the grammatical consistency of 『by watching... than by reading...』.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: It costs us only several hours to know the whole story, so that we can understand it more easily by watching the films than by reading the original work. However, if we read the original work, we can get more details, and the words in the books are graceful.
error: , but
correction: . However,
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The original sentence uses a comma to connect two independent complete clauses 〈pour milk into〉 and 〈but if...〉, constituting a typical 'comma splice' error. According to English grammar rules, a period should be used for separation, changing 〈, but〉 to 『. But』, making the two sentences independent; ② Conjunction Error: When 〈, but〉 is used as a coordinating conjunction, it cannot connect two independent clauses. It should be changed to the more formal transitional adverb 『However』 used with a period, forming the standard transitional structure 『. However,』, which maintains sentence independence and clearly indicates the contrast; ③ Punctuation Error: When the transitional adverb 『However』 is at the beginning of a sentence, a comma must be added after it, so the missing comma is supplied, forming the standard usage 『However,』.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: However, if we read the original work, we can get more details, and the words in the books are graceful.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: A necessary comma is missing between the parallel structures 〈get more details〉 and 〈the words...〉. According to English rules for parallel elements, a comma is added to form the correct structure 『get more details, and the words』.

error_sentence: Today, many original works have been adapted for films, such as The Hunger Game and The Loard of the Rings, it costs us only serval hours to know the whole story, even that we can understand easier by watching the films than reading the original work, but if we read the original work, we can get more details and the words in the books is graceful.
correct_sentence: However, if we read the original work, we can get more details, and the words in the books are graceful.
error: is
correction: are
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Subject-Verb Agreement Error: The subject 〈words〉 is a plural noun, while the verb used is the singular form 〈is〉. According to the principle of subject-verb agreement, it should be changed to the plural form 『are』, forming the correct combination 『the words are』.

error_sentence: In my opinion, I think read the original work it's the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing, by the way, if you prefer watching movies, maybe you will miss many interesting contants in the original work.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, reading the original work is the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing.
error: I think read
correction: reading
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: 〈In my opinion〉 and 〈I think〉 are semantically completely repetitive. According to the principle of conciseness in English expression, the redundant 『I think』 is deleted, retaining the more idiomatic 『In my opinion』 for expressing views; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The base form of the verb 〈read〉 cannot directly serve as the subject of the sentence. According to English grammar rules, it should be changed to the gerund form 『reading』, making 『Reading the original work』 a legitimate gerund phrase functioning as the subject structure.

error_sentence: In my opinion, I think read the original work it's the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing, by the way, if you prefer watching movies, maybe you will miss many interesting contants in the original work.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, reading the original work is the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing.
error: it's
correction: is
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: The original sentence's 〈it's〉, as a contraction of 〈it is〉, is too colloquial and can easily cause ambiguity in formal written expression. According to sentence structure analysis, this part needs to clearly express the judgment that 'reading the original work is the best choice'; therefore, the pronoun form 〈it〉 in the contraction is deleted, retaining the full copula verb 〈is〉, to form the standard subject-copula-complement structure 『reading the original work is the best choice』.

error_sentence: In my opinion, I think read the original work it's the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing, by the way, if you prefer watching movies, maybe you will miss many interesting contants in the original work.
correct_sentence: In my opinion, reading the original work is the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing. By the way, if you prefer watching movies, you might miss many interesting details in the original work.
error: , by
correction: . By
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The original sentence uses a comma to connect two independent complete clauses 〈help us improve...〉 and 〈by the way...〉, constituting a typical 'comma splice' error. According to English grammar rules, a period should be used for separation, changing 〈, by〉 to 『. By』, making the two sentences independent; ② Case Error: As the beginning of a new sentence, the first letter of 〈by〉 is not capitalized, violating the English writing convention of capitalizing the first letter of a sentence. It should be changed to the capitalized form 『By』 to ensure correct formatting.

error_sentence: In my opinion, I think read the original work it's the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing, by the way, if you prefer watching movies, maybe you will miss many interesting contants in the original work.
correct_sentence: By the way, if you prefer watching movies, you might miss many interesting details in the original work.
error: maybe you will
correction: you might
error_type: Adverb Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Adverb Error: 〈maybe〉 and 〈will〉 are semantically repetitive (both express possibility), causing redundancy in expression. Deleting 『maybe』 and retaining 『will』 would fully express future possibility, making the sentence more concise. However, combined with the next correction, a more optimized modal verb solution is actually adopted; ② Other Error: 〈will〉 expresses a definite prediction, which is inconsistent with the speculative tone of the context. Changing to 『might』 can more accurately express the possibility of 'perhaps being able to', forming the appropriate modal structure 『might help us improve』.

error_sentence: In my opinion, I think read the original work it's the best choice because the graceful words can help us improve our style of writing, by the way, if you prefer watching movies, maybe you will miss many interesting contants in the original work.
correct_sentence: By the way, if you prefer watching movies, you might miss many interesting details in the original work.
error: contants
correction: details
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: 〈contants〉 is a misspelling and conceptually vague. According to the context, which requires expressing the meaning of 'specific details', it is changed to the accurate noun 『details』, which both meets semantic requirements and ensures professional expression.