Writing prompt: Written Expression.
Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay.
Assume you are Tommy; please describe your life last weekend based on the picture and the hints.

Student essay:
Last Saturday, I got up early. I played in the park when I ate my breakfast. There were many people in the park. They were played football rode a bike and so on. In te afternoon, I played basketball with my friend in the park. At Sunday, in the morning I did my homework and my mother would helped me in the different questions. Then my family would had a cleaned. In the afternoon, I watched TV. I had a good weekend. .

Corrected essay:
Last Saturday, I got up early. I played in the park after I ate my breakfast. There were many people in the park, playing football, riding bikes, and so on. In the afternoon, I played basketball with my friend in the park. On Sunday, in the morning, I did my homework and my mother helped me with the difficult questions. Then my family cleaned the house. In the afternoon, I watched TV. I had a good weekend.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I played in the park when I ate my breakfast.
correct_sentence: I played in the park after I ate my breakfast.
error: when
correction: after
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: In English, the conjunction 〈when〉 indicates simultaneous actions, but the context requires expressing a sequential time relationship. Therefore, 『after』 replaces 〈when〉 to accurately convey that 〈playing〉 occurred after 〈eating breakfast〉.

error_sentence: There were many people in the park. They were played football rode a bike and so on.
correct_sentence: There were many people in the park, playing football, riding bikes, and so on.
error: . They were played football rode a bike
correction: , playing football, riding bikes,
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: Because the present participles 『playing football』 and 『riding bikes』 function as adverbials of accompanying circumstances, a comma is used to separate them from the main clause; ② Sentence Structure Error: The original sentence 〈They were played football rode a bike〉 uses a confusing structure, making the meaning unclear. 〈were played〉 (passive voice) does not fit the active context and should be changed to the present participles 『playing football』 and 『riding bikes』 to indicate accompanying actions.

error_sentence: In te afternoon, I played basketball with my friend in the park.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I played basketball with my friend in the park.
error: te
correction: the
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, the word 〈te〉 is misspelled; the correct form is 『the』. This is a spelling error involving an article, so 〈te〉 is changed to 『the』.

error_sentence: At Sunday, in the morning I did my homework and my mother would helped me in the different questions.
correct_sentence: On Sunday, in the morning, I did my homework and my mother helped me with the difficult questions.
error: At
correction: On
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Preposition Error: In English, to specify a particular day of the week, the structure 'on + day' is used, so the English expression for 'on Sunday' is 『On Sunday』, not 〈At Sunday〉. Therefore, 〈At〉 is changed to 『on』.

error_sentence: At Sunday, in the morning I did my homework and my mother would helped me in the different questions.
correct_sentence: On Sunday, in the morning, I did my homework and my mother helped me with the difficult questions.
correction: ,
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, when the time adverbial 〈in the morning〉 precedes the main clause, a comma should be added after it to separate it from the main clause, ensuring sentence clarity.

error_sentence: At Sunday, in the morning I did my homework and my mother would helped me in the different questions.
correct_sentence: On Sunday, in the morning, I did my homework and my mother helped me with the difficult questions.
error: would
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: The first clause 'On Sunday, in the morning, I did my homework' uses the simple past tense, indicating an action that occurred at a specific time in the past; however, the second clause 'my mother would help me with the difficult questions' uses the future-in-the-past tense, indicating an action expected to happen from a past perspective. Here, the simple past tense should be used directly to describe this past action, as the action of 'helping' logically occurred almost simultaneously with or immediately after 'doing homework', and both are past events. Therefore, 〈would〉 is deleted.

error_sentence: At Sunday, in the morning I did my homework and my mother would helped me in the different questions.
correct_sentence: On Sunday, in the morning, I did my homework and my mother helped me with the difficult questions.
error: in the different
correction: with the difficult
error_type: Adjective Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English collocations, 'help sb. in' is incorrect; the correct collocation is 'help sb. with', meaning 'to assist someone with something'. Therefore, 〈in〉 is changed to 『with』; ② Adjective Error: Based on the context, the meaning of 〈different〉 (different) does not fit; it needs to be changed to 『difficult』 (difficult).

error_sentence: Then my family would had a cleaned.
correct_sentence: Then my family cleaned the house.
error: would had a cleaned
correction: cleaned the house
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement to describe activities last weekend, 〈would had〉 is an incorrect tense structure and should be changed to the simple past tense 『cleaned』; ② Noun Error: 〈a cleaned〉 is an incorrect expression; the object 『the house』 needs to be added to complete the meaning, indicating 'cleaned the house'.

error_sentence: I had a good weekend. .
correct_sentence: I had a good weekend.
error: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English writing conventions, only one period should be used at the end of a declarative sentence. Therefore, the extra period 〈.〉 should be deleted to maintain punctuation correctness.