Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Assume you are Tina; introduce your Monday routine to everyone. Writing hints: get up; have breakfast; go to school; begin; have lunch; go home.

Student essay:
I'm Tina. This is my Monday. I get up at 6:30 , after l have breakfast at 7:30 p.m., after l go to school at 8:00. After school, l begin have first lesson. At noon , l have lunch at school. In the evening , Igo home at 5:30.

Corrected essay:
I'm Tina. This is my Monday. I get up at 6:30 a.m., and after that I have breakfast at 7:30 a.m. Then I go to school at 8:00 a.m. After arriving at school, I begin my first lesson. At noon, I have lunch at school. In the afternoon, I go home at 5:30 p.m.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I get up at 6:30 , after l have breakfast at 7:30 p.m., after l go to school at 8:00.
correct_sentence: I get up at 6:30 a.m., and after that I have breakfast at 7:30 a.m.
error: , after l
correction: a.m., and after that I
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English expression conventions, 'a.m.' or 'p.m.' is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon; here, 『a.m.』 needs to be added after the time expression 〈6:30〉 to clarify '6:30 in the morning'; ② Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈,〉 cannot connect two sentences; conjunctions are needed between actions in a sentence to maintain semantic coherence, so 〈after〉 is changed to 『and after that』 to fit the semantic coherence; ③ Pronoun Error: The subject 〈l〉 should be capitalized as 『I』; it was incorrectly written as the lowercase letter 'L' in the text.

error_sentence: I get up at 6:30 , after l have breakfast at 7:30 p.m., after l go to school at 8:00.
correct_sentence: I get up at 6:30 a.m., and after that I have breakfast at 7:30 a.m. Then I go to school at 8:00 a.m.
error: p.m., after l
correction: a.m. Then I
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English expression conventions, 'a.m.' or 'p.m.' is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon; here, 『a.m.』 should replace 〈p.m.〉 after the time expression 〈7:30〉 to clarify '7:30 in the morning'; ② Conjunction Error: According to English grammar rules, the consecutive use of 〈after〉 causes logical confusion; it needs to be changed to 『Then』 to connect the actions.

error_sentence: I get up at 6:30 , after l have breakfast at 7:30 p.m., after l go to school at 8:00. After school, l begin have first lesson.
correct_sentence: Then I go to school at 8:00 a.m. After arriving at school, I begin my first lesson.
error: . After
correction: a.m. After arriving at
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Determiner Error: According to English expression conventions, 'a.m.' or 'p.m.' is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon; here, 『a.m.』 needs to be added after the time expression 〈8:00〉 to clarify '8 o'clock in the morning'; ② Verb Choice Error: According to English grammar rules and sentence meaning, the original text intends to express 'After arriving at school, I began my first lesson', but 〈After school〉 means 'after school dismissal', which contradicts the context time. Therefore, it should be changed to 『After arriving at』 to clarify the logical relationship between the action's time and place.

error_sentence: After school, l begin have first lesson.
correct_sentence: After arriving at school, I begin my first lesson.
error: l begin have
correction: I begin my
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, the subject pronoun 〈l〉 was incorrectly spelled as the lowercase letter 'L'; therefore, it is changed to 『I』; ② Nonfinite Verb Form Error: The form of the verb 〈have〉 in 〈begin have〉 does not comply with grammatical rules; 'begin' is generally followed by 'to + base form of the verb' to mean 'start doing something'; here, the auxiliary 'to' is missing, and 〈begin have〉 cannot be used directly; ③ Noun Possessive Error: According to English grammar rules, 'lesson' requires a possessive determiner; 『my』 should be added before 〈first lesson〉 to indicate possession.

error_sentence: At noon , l have lunch at school.
correct_sentence: At noon, I have lunch at school.
error: l
correction: I
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to English writing conventions, the subject pronoun 〈l〉 was incorrectly written as the lowercase letter 'L'; therefore, it is changed to 『I』.

error_sentence: In the evening , Igo home at 5:30.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I go home at 5:30 p.m.
error: evening , Igo
correction: afternoon, I go
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Noun Error: According to English grammar rules and sentence meaning, 〈evening〉 (night) does not match the specific time 〈5:30〉; it should be changed to 『afternoon』 to mean 'afternoon'; ② Space Error: According to the sentence meaning, the original text intends to express 'I go home at 5:30 in the afternoon'; therefore, 〈Igo〉 should be changed to 『I go』 to fit the correct sentence meaning.

error_sentence: In the evening , Igo home at 5:30.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I go home at 5:30 p.m.
error: .
correction: p.m.
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English expression conventions, 'a.m.' or 'p.m.' is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon; here, 『p.m.』 should be added after the time expression 〈5:30〉 to clarify '5:30 in the afternoon'.