Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Assume you are Tina; introduce your Monday routine to everyone. Writing hints: get up; have breakfast; go to school; begin; have lunch; go home.

Student essay:
Hello! I'm Tina, I have a fun day, I want to tell you. In the morning, I get up and I have breakfast, then I go to school. At 8 o'clock my first class is begining and over school at 11:40, I go to dining hall and have lunch. In evening, I go home. What about you?

Corrected essay:
Hello! I'm Tina. I have a fun day, and I want to tell you. In the morning, I get up and I have breakfast, and then I go to school. At 8 o'clock my first class begins and is over at 11:40 a.m. I go to the dining hall and have lunch. In the evening, I go home. What about you?

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I'm Tina, I have a fun day, I want to tell you.
correct_sentence: I'm Tina.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English grammar rules, using a comma to connect two independent clauses 〈I'm Tina〉 and 〈I have a fun day〉 is incorrect, resulting in a comma splice. Since both clauses can stand alone as sentences and are not joined by a coordinating conjunction, the comma 〈,〉 should be changed to a period 『.』, and the following word should be capitalized, changing 〈Tina, I〉 to 『Tina. I』 to comply with English compound sentence writing conventions.

error_sentence: I'm Tina, I have a fun day, I want to tell you.
correct_sentence: I have a fun day, and I want to tell you.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English compound sentence writing conventions, when the clauses 〈I have a fun day〉 and 〈I want to tell you〉 express a logical progression, a coordinating conjunction must be used to connect them. Therefore, the coordinating conjunction 『and』 should be added between the two clauses, retaining the original comma 〈,〉 as a clause separator, modifying the structure to 『I have a fun day, and I want to tell you』 to meet the grammatical requirements for English coordinate compound sentences.

error_sentence: In the morning, I get up and I have breakfast, then I go to school.
correct_sentence: In the morning, I get up and I have breakfast, and then I go to school.
correction: and
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Conjunction Error: According to English conventions for expressing chronological order, when the clauses 〈I have breakfast〉 and 〈then I go to school〉 describe sequential actions, a conjunction must be used to clarify the time relationship. Since 'then' is an adverb of time and not a conjunction, the coordinating conjunction 『and』 needs to be added for proper connection, modifying the structure to 『I have breakfast, and then I go to school』 to comply with the grammatical rules for expressing time sequences in English and maintain semantic coherence.

error_sentence: At 8 o'clock my first class is begining and over school at 11:40, I go to dining hall and have lunch.
correct_sentence: At 8 o'clock my first class begins and is over at 11:40 a.m.
error: is begining and over school
correction: begins and is over
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to English verb conjugation rules, the subject 〈my first class〉 is third-person singular. The word 〈begining〉 contains both a spelling error and is the incorrect verb form. It should be changed from the incorrect present participle form 〈begining〉 to the third-person singular simple present tense 『begins』, forming the correct structure 『my first class begins』 to maintain subject-verb agreement; ② Verb Choice Error: According to common English expressions, 〈over school〉 is not the standard way to state that a class has ended. The structure 『is over』 should be used to indicate completion, changing the incorrect phrase 〈over school〉 to 『is over』, resulting in the standard expression 『my first class is over』 to accurately convey the meaning 'the first class ends'.

error_sentence: At 8 o'clock my first class is begining and over school at 11:40, I go to dining hall and have lunch.
correct_sentence: At 8 o'clock my first class begins and is over at 11:40 a.m.
error: ,
correction: a.m.
error_type: Noun Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Noun Error: According to English time expression conventions, when a numerical time like 〈11:40〉 is stated independently, it must be accompanied by a time period marker (a.m./p.m.) to specify the exact time of day. Since this time clearly falls in the morning period, the standard abbreviation 『a.m.』 should be added after the time, changing 〈11:40〉 to 『11:40 a.m.』.

error_sentence: At 8 o'clock my first class is begining and over school at 11:40, I go to dining hall and have lunch.
correct_sentence: I go to the dining hall and have lunch.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules regarding article usage, the noun 〈dining hall〉 refers to a specific place known to both parties in the sentence, indicating specific reference. Therefore, the definite article 『the』 must be added before the noun for specification, changing 〈dining hall〉 to 『the dining hall』.

error_sentence: In evening, I go home.
correct_sentence: In the evening, I go home.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English time expression conventions, the phrase 〈In evening〉 is missing an article. When referring to a specific time period, the time noun 〈evening〉 requires modification by the definite article; in the fixed expression, 『the』 must be added to form 『in the evening』 to comply with standard English usage.