Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the table, write a short essay.
Gao Feng is a football fan. He owns four footballs and many photos of soccer stars, but he never plays football; he only watches games on TV. He has two friends, Mike and Dave. Based on the table hints, introduce the hobbies of Gao Feng and his two friends in about 50 words.
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Student essay:
Gao Feng is a footballfans, he has four football, and he has many star photos. But he never play football, he just watch footballmatch on the TV. He has two good friends, Mike and Dave. Mike can play basketball, but he can't play ping-pong. Dave can play football, but he can't play baseball.

Corrected essay:
Gao Feng is a football fan. He has four footballs, and he has many star photos, but he never plays football. He just watches football matches on TV. He has two good friends, Mike and Dave. Mike can play basketball, but he can't play ping-pong. Dave can play football, but he can't play baseball.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Gao Feng is a footballfans, he has four football, and he has many star photos.
correct_sentence: Gao Feng is a football fan. He has four footballs, and he has many star photos, but he never plays football.
error: footballfans, he
correction: football fan. He
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Space Error: The English expression for “足球迷” is “football fan”, consisting of two separate words, not a compound word, so 〈footballfans〉 should be separated by a space into 『football fans』 to conform to English expression norms.; ② Noun Number Error: According to the prompt “高峰是一个足球迷” (Gao Feng is a football fan), and limited by the indefinite article 〈a〉, 『fans』 should be changed to the singular countable noun form 『fan』 to comply with the prompt and English grammar rules.; ③ Punctuation Error: 〈Gao Feng is a football fan〉 and 〈he has four football〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and form two clauses that can stand alone as sentences, thus requiring separation by a period; 〈, he〉 should be changed to 『. He』 to conform to English syntax rules.

error_sentence: Gao Feng is a footballfans, he has four football, and he has many star photos.
correct_sentence: He has four footballs, and he has many star photos, but he never plays football.
error: football
correction: footballs
error_type: Noun Number Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Noun Number Error: According to English grammar rules, the number 〈four〉 requires a plural countable noun form after it, so 〈football〉 needs to be changed to 『footballs』 to maintain noun number consistency.

error_sentence: Gao Feng is a footballfans, he has four football, and he has many star photos. But he never play football, he just watch footballmatch on the TV.
correct_sentence: He has four footballs, and he has many star photos, but he never plays football.
error: . But
correction: , but
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to English syntax rules, when the coordinating conjunction 〈but〉 connects two clauses, a comma, not a period, is needed for separation; therefore, 〈. But〉 should be changed to 『, but』 to comply with English syntax rules.

error_sentence: But he never play football, he just watch footballmatch on the TV.
correct_sentence: He has four footballs, and he has many star photos, but he never plays football. He just watches football matches on TV.
error: play football, he just watch footballmatch on the
correction: plays football. He just watches football matches on
error_type: Subject-Verb Agreement Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English grammar, the third-person singular subject 〈he〉 requires the third-person singular verb form; 〈play〉 and 〈watch〉 should be changed to 『plays』 and 『watches』 to maintain subject-verb agreement and comply with English grammar.; ② Punctuation Error: 〈he never play football〉 and 〈he just watch footballmatch on the TV〉 contain independent subject-verb structures and form two clauses that can stand alone as sentences, thus requiring separation by a period; 〈, he〉 should be changed to 『. He』 to conform to English syntax rules.; ③ Space Error: The English for “足球赛” is “football match”, which consists of two separate words, not a compound noun. Based on the meaning, the plural countable noun form should be used here for general reference, so the compound word 〈footballmatch〉 should be separated and changed to the plural form 『football matches』.; ④ Determiner Error: The fixed English expression for “on television” is on TV, which does not require a determiner; therefore, 〈on the TV〉 needs to be changed to 『on TV』 to comply with the English fixed phrase.