Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Based on the information provided about Sarah and the picture, describe her winter holiday. The beginning is provided:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule.

Student essay:
My name is sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. At 7:40a. m, I'm getting up. At 8:30 to 9:45, I am reading English texts. The day time, I'm doing my homework. In the afternoon, I'm taking exercise, cleaning house and cooking. after supper, I'm watching TV or movies.

Corrected essay:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. At 7:40 a.m., I get up. From 8:30 to 9:45, I read English texts. In the daytime, I do my homework. In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook. After supper, I watch TV or movies.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My name is sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year.
correct_sentence: My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year.
error: sarah
correction: Sarah
error_type: Case Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a proper name needs to be capitalized; 〈sarah〉 is a proper name, therefore 〈sarah〉 needs to be changed to 『Sarah』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: At 7:40a. m, I'm getting up.
correct_sentence: At 7:40 a.m., I get up.
error: 7:40a. m
correction: 7:40 a.m.
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Space Error: According to English writing conventions, the time format needs a space after the number; in the original sentence, 〈7:40a. m〉 lacks the necessary space, so the conjoined 〈7:40a. m〉 is changed to 『7:40 a.m.』 to conform to English writing conventions; ② Determiner Error: According to English expression habits, 'a.m.' or 'p.m.' is usually added after the time to indicate morning or afternoon; the original sentence 〈a. m〉 is incorrect and should be changed to 『a.m.』 to clearly indicate the time.

error_sentence: m, I'm getting up.
correct_sentence: At 7:40 a.m., I get up.
error: 'm getting
correction: get
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement, the simple present tense should be used, whereas in the original sentence 〈I'm getting〉 is in the progressive tense; therefore, 〈I'm getting〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『I get』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: At 8:30 to 9:45, I am reading English texts.
correct_sentence: From 8:30 to 9:45, I read English texts.
error: At
correction: From
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 〈At〉 is used to indicate specific points in time; to express a time range from a start to an end, the “From...to” structure is used. Therefore, 〈At〉 needs to be changed to 『From』 to correctly express the time range.

error_sentence: At 8:30 to 9:45, I am reading English texts.
correct_sentence: From 8:30 to 9:45, I read English texts.
error: am reading
correction: read
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement, the simple present tense should be used, whereas in the original sentence 〈am reading〉 is in the present progressive tense; therefore, 〈am reading〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『read』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: The day time, I'm doing my homework.
correct_sentence: In the daytime, I do my homework.
error: The day time
correction: In the daytime
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English expression habits, the preposition 『In』 is used to indicate a period of time; the original phrase 'the day time' lacks a preposition, so the preposition 『In』 is added before 〈the〉 to conform to English expression habits; ② Spelling Error: The English expression for '白天的' (of the daytime) is 'daytime', not 'day time', therefore 〈day time〉 is changed to 『daytime』.

error_sentence: The day time, I'm doing my homework.
correct_sentence: In the daytime, I do my homework.
error: 'm doing
correction: do
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement, the simple present tense should be used, whereas in the original sentence 〈I'm doing〉 is in the progressive tense; therefore, 〈I'm doing〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『I do』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: In the afternoon, I'm taking exercise, cleaning house and cooking.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook.
error: 'm taking
correction: take
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement, the simple present tense should be used, whereas in the original sentence 〈I'm taking〉 is in the progressive tense; therefore, 〈I'm taking〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『I take』 to fit the context.

error_sentence: In the afternoon, I'm taking exercise, cleaning house and cooking.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook.
error: cleaning
correction: clean the
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement, the simple present tense should be used, whereas in the original sentence 〈cleaning〉 is in the progressive tense; therefore, 〈cleaning〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『clean』 to fit the context; ② Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, the definite article 『the』 indicates specificity; the original sentence's 〈house〉 lacks the necessary determiner 『the』 to specify the object, so 『the』 needs to be added before 〈house〉 to clarify the meaning.

error_sentence: In the afternoon, I'm taking exercise, cleaning house and cooking. after supper, I'm watching TV or movies.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I take exercise, clean the house and cook. After supper, I watch TV or movies.
error: cooking. after
correction: cook. After
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement, the simple present tense should be used, whereas in the original sentence 〈cooking〉 is in the progressive tense; therefore, 〈cooking〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『cook』 to fit the context; ② Case Error: According to English writing conventions, the first letter of a word at the beginning of a sentence needs to be capitalized; in the original sentence, 〈after〉 is at the beginning of the sentence, therefore 〈after〉 needs to be changed to 『After』 to conform to the convention.

error_sentence: after supper, I'm watching TV or movies.
correct_sentence: After supper, I watch TV or movies.
error: 'm watching
correction: watch
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the prompt's requirement, the simple present tense should be used, whereas in the original sentence 〈I'm watching〉 is in the progressive tense; therefore, 〈I'm watching〉 needs to be changed to the simple present tense 『I watch』 to fit the context.