Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Based on the information provided about Sarah and the picture, describe her winter holiday. The beginning is provided:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule.

Student essay:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. At 7:40 o'clock, I got up. At 8:30-9:45, I read English texts. During the day time, I did my homework. In the afternoon, I took exercise, cleaned house and cooked. After super, I watched TV or movies.

Corrected essay:
My name is Sarah, and I had a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. At 7:40 a.m., I got up. From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts. During the daytime, I did my homework. In the afternoon, I took exercise, cleaned the house and cooked. After supper, I watched TV or movies.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year.
correct_sentence: My name is Sarah, and I had a good winter holiday this year.
error: have
correction: had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the essay prompt, the tense should be past tense, describing past winter holiday experiences; 〈have〉 needs to be changed to the past tense 『had』 to meet the tense requirement.

error_sentence: At 7:40 o'clock, I got up.
correct_sentence: At 7:40 a.m., I got up.
error: o'clock
correction: a.m.
error_type: Format Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: Format Error: According to English writing conventions, 〈o'clock〉 in the time expression 〈7:40 o'clock〉 is not suitable for specific minute time indications; 〈7:40 o'clock〉 should be changed to 『7:40 a.m.』 to conform to English time format.

error_sentence: At 8:30-9:45, I read English texts.
correct_sentence: From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m., I read English texts.
error: At 8:30-9:45
correction: From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m.
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English grammar rules and sentence meaning, the original text expresses a time period, which requires the use of “from...to...”; therefore, 〈At 8:30-9:45〉 should be changed to 『From 8:30 a.m. to 9:45 a.m.』 to correctly indicate the start and end of the time period.

error_sentence: During the day time, I did my homework.
correct_sentence: During the daytime, I did my homework.
error: day time
correction: daytime
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning and English writing conventions, the original text means “During the day, I did my homework”, and 〈day time〉 is an incorrect split form; it should be changed to 『daytime』 to conform to word spelling norms and sentence meaning.

error_sentence: In the afternoon, I took exercise, cleaned house and cooked.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I took exercise, cleaned the house and cooked.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, 〈house〉 is a countable noun, and here it specifically refers to “cleaning one's own house”; the definite article 『the』 needs to be added to form 『cleaned the house』, complying with English noun determination rules.

error_sentence: After super, I watched TV or movies.
correct_sentence: After supper, I watched TV or movies.
error: super
correction: supper
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the sentence meaning, the original phrase 〈After super〉 means “after dinner”; 〈super〉 is a misspelling, therefore 〈super〉 should be changed to 『supper』 to express the correct meaning.