Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Assume you are Tina; introduce your Monday routine to everyone. Writing hints: get up; have breakfast; go to school; begin; have lunch; go home.

Student essay:
I'm Tina and I am very busy on Monday. I get up aat 6:00a. m and I have bath. I have breakfast at 6:30a.m.And then I go to school with my friends. I begin have lessons at 7:30a.m.I am drawing pictures and reading books. I have lunch at 12:00 o'clock. In the afternoon, I play balls and toys. And then I go back home at 5:00p.m.And I go to sleep at 9:00p.m.

Corrected essay:
I'm Tina and I am very busy on Monday. I get up at 6:00 a.m. and I have a bath. I have breakfast at 6:30 a.m. And then I go to school with my friends. I begin to have lessons at 7:30 a.m. I draw pictures and read books. I have lunch at 12:00. In the afternoon, I play with balls and toys. And then I go back home at 5:00 p.m. And I go to sleep at 9:00 p.m.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I get up aat 6:00a. m
correct_sentence: I get up at 6:00 a.m.
error: aat 6:00a. m
correction: at 6:00 a.m.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Spelling Error: Based on the context, 〈aat〉 is a misspelling of the preposition 『at』; it is corrected to 『at』 to introduce the time adverbial; ② Space Error: According to English writing rules, time expressions require a space between the number and 〈a.m.〉; therefore, a space is added after 〈6:00〉 to make it 『6:00 a.m.』; ③ Space Error: According to English writing rules, the time expression for "morning" 『a.m.』 does not contain a space; therefore, the space in 〈a. m.〉 is removed to make it 『a.m.』; ④ Punctuation Error: The sentence “I get up at 6:00 a.m” has an independent subject-verb structure and should end with a period 『.』; therefore, a period 『.』 is added at the end to comply with English writing conventions.

error_sentence: and I have bath.
correct_sentence: and I have a bath.
correction: a
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to the sentence meaning, the countable noun 〈bath〉 here expresses 'take a bath' and should be in singular form; therefore, the indefinite article 『a』 needs to be added before the singular countable noun 〈bath〉 to conform to English grammar rules.

error_sentence: I have breakfast at 6:30a.m.
correct_sentence: I have breakfast at 6:30 a.m.
error: 6:30a.m.
correction: 6:30 a.m.
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing rules, time expressions require a space between the number and 〈a.m.〉; therefore, a space is added after 〈6:30〉 to make it 『6:30 a.m.』.

error_sentence: I begin have lessons at 7:30a.m.
correct_sentence: I begin to have lessons at 7:30 a.m.
correction: to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to the sentence meaning and English grammar rules, the verb 〈begin〉 here should be followed by the infinitive 'to do' to express 'start doing something'; therefore, the base form verb 〈have〉 is changed to 『to have』 to form the correct collocation.

error_sentence: I begin have lessons at 7:30a.m. I am drawing pictures and reading books.
correct_sentence: I begin to have lessons at 7:30 a.m. I draw pictures and read books.
error: 7:30a.m.I am drawing
correction: 7:30 a.m. I draw
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Space Error: The time 〈7:30〉 and the morning indicator 〈a.m.〉 are separate words and should be separated by a space; therefore, a space is added to change it to 『7:30 a.m.』; ② Space Error: 〈I begin to have lessons at 7:30 a.m.〉 is a complete sentence, and a space should follow the period at the end to separate it from the next sentence; therefore, 〈a.m.I〉 is changed to 『a.m. I』 by adding a space to comply with English writing conventions; ③ Verb Tense Error: Describing daily activities should use the simple present tense 『draw』, not the present continuous tense 〈am drawing〉.

error_sentence: I am drawing pictures and reading books.
correct_sentence: I draw pictures and read books.
error: reading
correction: read
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: Based on the context, the entire passage describes daily activities rather than a specific moment; therefore, the present participle 〈reading〉 should be changed to the simple present tense 『read』 to maintain consistent tense and ensure smooth expression.

error_sentence: I have lunch at 12:00 o'clock.
correct_sentence: I have lunch at 12:00.
error: o'clock
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English expression conventions, 〈12:00〉 already clearly indicates the hour on the dot; 〈o'clock〉 is redundant as it repeats the meaning of 〈:00〉. Therefore, 〈o'clock〉 needs to be deleted, keeping only 『12:00』 to conform to modern English usage habits.

error_sentence: In the afternoon, I play balls and toys.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, I play with balls and toys.
correction: with
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to the sentence meaning, 〈play balls〉 here does not refer to a specific ball game; both 〈balls〉 and 〈toys〉 are objects of play. Here, 〈play〉 is used as an intransitive verb meaning 'to play', and the preposition 『with』 needs to be added after it to introduce the objects of play, conforming to English expression habits.

error_sentence: And then I go back home at 5:00p.m.
correct_sentence: And then I go back home at 5:00 p.m.
error: 5:00p.m.
correction: 5:00 p.m.
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing rules, time expressions require a space between the number and 〈p.m.〉; therefore, a space needs to be added after 〈5:00〉 to make it 『5:00 p.m.』 to comply with writing conventions.

error_sentence: And I go to sleep at 9:00p.m.
correct_sentence: And I go to sleep at 9:00 p.m.
error: 9:00p.m.
correction: 9:00 p.m.
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 1
error_description: Space Error: According to English writing rules, time expressions require a space between the number and 〈p.m.〉; therefore, a space needs to be added after 〈9:00〉 to make it 『9:00 p.m.』 to comply with writing conventions.