Writing prompt: Assume you are Emily. Below is your family photo. Please introduce your family members based on the picture. Requirement: Write at least 6 sentences.

Student essay:
Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite. This is my family, I love my family

Corrected essay:
Hello, I'm Emily. I'm 11. I'm thin and tall. I have a big family, and I have my mom, my daddy, and my sister. My mom is short. My daddy is tall and thin. He is strong. My sister is 8. She is smart and quiet. This is my family. I love my family.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: Hello, I'm Emily.
error: Family
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: Based on the context, the word 〈Family〉 at the beginning of the sentence is repetitive with the subsequent content and does not conform to grammatical structure; therefore, 『Family』 is deleted to make the sentence more concise and idiomatic.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: Hello, I'm Emily. I'm 11.
error: , I'm11
correction: . I'm 11.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: According to English grammar, consecutive sentences need to be separated by a period; therefore, the comma 〈,〉 between 〈 I'm Emily〉 and 〈I'm11〉 should be changed to a period 『.』 to comply with grammatical norms; ② Space Error: A space is needed before the number 〈11〉 to separate words, changed to 『I'm 11』 to ensure correct formatting; ③ Punctuation Error: 〈 I'm11〉 and 〈I'm thin and tall〉 are two independent sentences, requiring a period 『.』 between them to meet grammatical requirements.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: I'm thin and tall.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: According to grammatical rules, two independent clauses 〈I'm thin and tall〉 and 〈I have a big family〉 need to be separated by a period; therefore, the comma 〈,〉 should be replaced with a period 『.』 to comply with grammatical norms.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: I have a big family, and I have my mom, my daddy, and my sister.
error: have Mom Daddy and Sister,
correction: and I have my mom, my daddy, and my sister.
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Sentence Structure Error: 〈have Mom Daddy and Sister〉 lacks a subject, making the meaning incomplete. Adding the conjunction 'and' and the subject 'I', changing it to 『and I have my mom, my daddy, and my sister』 completes the sentence structure; ② Pronoun Error: In English grammar, possessive pronouns are needed before family member titles to indicate possession; 〈Mom, Daddy and Sister〉 should be changed to 'my Mom, my Daddy and my Sister'; ③ Case Error: 〈Mom, Daddy, Sister〉 should all be changed to lowercase 『mom, daddy, sister』 to conform to idiomatic expression.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: My mom is short.
error: stirt,
correction: short.
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Punctuation Error: The meaning before 〈My mom is stirt, 〉 is complete and requires a period 『.』 to indicate the end; therefore, the comma 〈,〉 should be changed to 『.』; ② Spelling Error: The correct form of the adjective 'short' is 『short』; 〈stirt〉 should be changed to 『short』 for correct spelling.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: My daddy is tall and thin. He is strong.
error: hi
correction: . He
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 4
error_description: ① Pronoun Error: In English, the pronoun for a male subject is 『he』; therefore, 〈hi〉 is changed to 『he』 to comply with grammatical norms; ② Punctuation Error: In English, independent clauses need to be separated by a period; 〈thin hi〉 is changed to 『thin. He』.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: He is strong.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: Based on the context, 〈My daddy is tall and thin〉 and 〈hi is strong〉 are independent clauses; therefore, the comma 〈,〉 is replaced with a period 『.』 to comply with grammatical rules.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: My sister is 8. She is smart and quiet.
error: she
correction: . She
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The independent clauses 〈My sister is 8〉 and 〈she is smart〉 need to be separated by a period, changed to 『My sister is 8. She』.

error_sentence: Family Hello, I'm Emily, I'm11 I'm thin and tall, I have a big family, have Mom Daddy and Sister, My mom is stirt, My daddy is tall and thin hi is strong, My sister is 8 she is smart and quite.
correct_sentence: She is smart and quiet.
error: quite
correction: quiet
error_type: Spelling Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Spelling Error: According to the meaning, the adjective here should be 'quiet'; the correct spelling is 『quiet』, therefore 〈quite〉 is changed to 『quiet』 for correct spelling.

error_sentence: This is my family, I love my family
correct_sentence: This is my family.
error: ,
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The two independent clauses 〈This is my family〉 and 〈I love my family〉 need to be separated by a period 『.』; therefore, the comma 〈,〉 between them is changed to 『.』 to comply with grammatical norms.

error_sentence: This is my family, I love my family
correct_sentence: I love my family.
correction: .
error_type: Punctuation Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Punctuation Error: The sentence 〈I love my family〉 lacks a period at the end; 『.』 needs to be added to complete the sentence structure and make the text flow smoothly.