Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Assume you are Tina; introduce your Monday routine to everyone. Writing hints: get up; have breakfast; go to school; begin; have lunch; go home.

Student essay:
I will talk you my life on Monday. First, I get up at 7a.m. I like eat some break on breakfast. Then, I go to school and at the beginning of running. Then have lunch. Finally, I go to home.

Corrected essay:
I will tell you about my life on Monday. First, I get up at 7 a.m. I like to eat some breakfast. Then, I go to school and begin running. Then I have lunch. Finally, I go home.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: I will talk you my life on Monday.
correct_sentence: I will tell you about my life on Monday.
error: talk you
correction: tell you about
error_type: Verb Choice Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Verb Choice Error: According to English verb usage rules, 〈talk〉 is an intransitive verb and cannot directly take a double object structure (sb + sth), whereas 『tell』 is a transitive verb and can take the structure "tell sb sth" or "tell sb about sth". Therefore, the incorrect collocation 〈talk you〉 is changed to the grammatically correct 『tell you』; ② Preposition Error: To fully express the meaning of "telling about something", the preposition 『about』 needs to be added after the verb to form the standard phrase structure 『tell sb about sth』.

error_sentence: First, I get up at 7a.m. I like eat some break on breakfast.
correct_sentence: I like to eat some breakfast.
correction: to
error_type: Nonfinite Verb Form Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Nonfinite Verb Form Error: According to English grammar rules, when the verb 〈like〉 is followed by another verb to express preference, it must use either the infinitive structure with 『to』 (to + base form) or the gerund form (v-ing). The original sentence 〈like eat〉 lacks the infinitive marker, so 『to』 needs to be added before 〈eat〉 to form the standard infinitive structure 『to eat』, ensuring the grammatical correctness of the verb phrase.

error_sentence: First, I get up at 7a.m. I like eat some break on breakfast.
correct_sentence: I like to eat some breakfast.
error: break on
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Word Redundancy Error: According to English fixed collocations and semantic analysis, the phrase 〈break on breakfast〉 has two issues: the noun 〈break〉 combined with the preposition 〈on〉 usually means "interrupt," which is unrelated to the concept of dining; in English, "eating breakfast" should be expressed directly using the noun 〈breakfast〉 or the verb phrase 〈have breakfast〉. Therefore, the redundant 〈break on〉 is deleted, retaining the core noun 〈breakfast〉 as the correct expression to ensure clear meaning.

error_sentence: Then, I go to school and at the beginning of running.
correct_sentence: Then, I go to school and begin running.
error: at the beginning of
correction: begin
error_type: Sentence Structure Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Sentence Structure Error: According to the need for expressing action, 〈at the beginning of〉 as a static prepositional phrase does not fit the description of a dynamic action, while the prompt word "begin" requires a verb structure. Therefore, the static prepositional phrase 〈at the beginning of running〉 is changed to the verb phrase 『begin running』 to express the dynamic action of starting to run, while maintaining the grammatical correctness of the gerund.

error_sentence: Then have lunch.
correct_sentence: Then I have lunch.
correction: I
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: According to English grammar rules, an independent clause must contain an explicit subject, and the imperative sentence 〈Then have lunch〉 does not fit the requirement for stating a fact in this context. Therefore, the first-person singular subject 『I』 is added to the incomplete sentence 〈Then have lunch〉, changing it to the complete declarative sentence 『Then I have lunch』 to comply with the basic grammatical standard of subject-verb structure.

error_sentence: Finally, I go to home.
correct_sentence: Finally, I go home.
error: to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Preposition Error: According to English fixed collocation rules, the verb 〈go〉 is directly used with the adverb of place 〈home〉 to form the idiomatic expression 『go home』, and adding the preposition 〈to〉 creates grammatical redundancy. Therefore, the redundant preposition 〈to〉 is deleted, correcting the incorrect collocation 〈go to home〉 to the proper phrase 『go home』 that conforms to English idiomatic usage, while maintaining semantic accuracy.