Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Based on the information provided about Sarah and the picture, describe her winter holiday. The beginning is provided:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule.

Student essay:
My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. At 7:40, Sarah gets up. At 8:40-9:45, she reads English texts. In the day time, she does her homework. In the afternoon, she takes exercise, cleans house, and cooks. After supper, she watches TV or movies.

Corrected essay:
My name is Sarah, and I had a good winter holiday this year. Let me tell you something about my holiday schedule. At 7:40, Sarah gets up. From 8:40 to 9:45, she reads English texts. In the daytime, she does her homework. In the afternoon, she takes exercise, cleans the house, and cooks. After supper, she watches TV or movies.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: My name is Sarah, and I have a good winter holiday this year.
correct_sentence: My name is Sarah, and I had a good winter holiday this year.
error: have
correction: had
error_type: Verb Tense Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Verb Tense Error: According to the context, the time adverbial 〈this year〉 combined with the winter holiday experience refers to the past, but the verb 〈have〉 is in the present tense, conflicting with the past time frame. According to English grammar rules, the present tense verb 〈have〉 needs to be changed to the past tense 『had』 to maintain tense consistency and correctly express a past action.

error_sentence: At 8:40-9:45, she reads English texts.
correct_sentence: From 8:40 to 9:45, she reads English texts.
error: At 8:40-
correction: From 8:40 to
error_type: Preposition Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: ① Preposition Error: According to English time expression conventions, indicating a time range requires the fixed phrase 〈from...to...〉, so the incorrect initial preposition 〈At〉 is corrected to 『From』; ② Punctuation Error: According to English writing rules, connecting a time interval requires the preposition 『to』, not a hyphen 〈-〉, so 〈8:40-〉 is corrected to 『8:40 to』 to ensure grammatical correctness and clarity of expression.

error_sentence: In the day time, she does her homework.
correct_sentence: In the daytime, she does her homework.
error: day time
correction: daytime
error_type: Space Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Space Error: According to English word formation rules, 〈day time〉 is an incorrect separated form, while 『daytime』 is a fixed compound noun specifically meaning 'the period of daylight'. Therefore, the separated phrase 〈day time〉 is changed to the compound word 『daytime』 to conform to standard English spelling conventions.

error_sentence: In the afternoon, she takes exercise, cleans house, and cooks.
correct_sentence: In the afternoon, she takes exercise, cleans the house, and cooks.
correction: the
error_type: Determiner Error
error_severity: 2
error_description: Determiner Error: According to English grammar rules, when the countable noun 〈house〉 is used as a specific object in the sentence, the definite article 『the』 must be added to form the structure 『cleans the house』. Therefore, 『the』 needs to be added after the verb 〈cleans〉 to comply with the definite usage of the noun, ensuring grammatical completeness and semantic accuracy.