Writing prompt: Using the given vocabulary and sentence patterns, and referring to the picture, write a short essay. Assume you are Tina; introduce your Monday routine to everyone. Writing hints: get up; have breakfast; go to school; begin; have lunch; go home.

Student essay:
I'm Tina. On Monday morning, she gets up, she has breakfast, then she goes to school. On Monday afternoon, she has lunch, then she goes to school again. On Monday evening, she goes home.

Corrected essay:
I'm Tina. On Monday morning, I get up, have breakfast, and then go to school. On Monday afternoon, I have lunch, and then go to school again. On Monday evening, I go home.

Error analysis:
error_sentence: On Monday morning, she gets up, she has breakfast, then she goes to school.
correct_sentence: On Monday morning, I get up, have breakfast, and then go to school.
error: she gets
correction: I get
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: Based on the principle of pronoun consistency in context, the first-person narrative perspective 〈I'm Tina〉 was established at the beginning, but the subsequent third-person pronoun 〈she〉 conflicts with the main narrative perspective; therefore, the pronoun 〈she〉 is changed to the first-person subject pronoun 『I』 to maintain narrative consistency. According to English subject-verb agreement rules, when the subject changes from the third-person 〈she〉 to the first-person 〈I〉, the original third-person singular verb form 〈gets〉 is no longer applicable and needs to be changed to the base form 『get』, finally forming the correct structure 『I get』 to comply with English grammar rules.

error_sentence: On Monday morning, she gets up, she has breakfast, then she goes to school.
correct_sentence: On Monday morning, I get up, have breakfast, and then go to school.
error: she has
correction: have
error_type: Word Redundancy Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Word Redundancy Error: According to the principle of conciseness in English expression, the subject 〈I〉 in the previous clause clearly refers to the speaker; subsequent repetition of 〈Tina〉 or 〈she〉 would cause confusion in reference and redundancy. Considering the continuity of actions in context, 〈she has breakfast〉 is integrated into a parallel structure without a subject, modified to 『I get up, have breakfast』 to maintain subject consistency and improve sentence fluency; ② Subject-Verb Agreement Error: According to English subject-verb agreement rules, when the subject is determined to be the first-person singular 〈I〉, the original third-person singular verb 〈has〉 needs to be adjusted to the first-person base form 『have』, forming the correct collocation 『I have breakfast』, finally merged and corrected into the coherent structure 『I get up, have breakfast』 to comply with grammar rules.

error_sentence: On Monday morning, she gets up, she has breakfast, then she goes to school.
correct_sentence: On Monday morning, I get up, have breakfast, and then go to school.
error: then she goes
correction: and then go
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English parallel structure rules, when listing three or more consecutive actions (get up, have breakfast, go to school), the conjunction 『and』 is required to connect the last two items. Therefore, the conjunction 『and』 should be added between 〈have breakfast〉 and 〈go to school〉, forming 『I get up, have breakfast, and go to school』 to comply with English rules for parallel sentence structures; ② Pronoun Error: The original sentence has a pronoun conflict, mixing the first-person 〈I〉 from earlier with the subsequent 〈she〉. Based on the principle of narrative consistency, the third-person subject 〈she〉 should be completely deleted, continuing the logic of the preceding first-person subject. According to subject-verb agreement, when 〈she〉 is deleted, the implied subject is still 〈I〉, so the original third-person singular verb 〈goes〉 must be changed to the first-person base form 『go』, finally corrected to 『I get up, have breakfast, and go to school』 to satisfy both grammatical accuracy and expressive coherence.

error_sentence: On Monday afternoon, she has lunch, then she goes to school again.
correct_sentence: On Monday afternoon, I have lunch, and then go to school again.
error: she has
correction: I have
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: Based on the principle of pronoun consistency in context, the first-person narrative perspective 〈I'm Tina〉 was established at the beginning, but the subsequent third-person pronoun 〈she〉 conflicts with the main narrative perspective; therefore, the pronoun 〈she〉 is changed to the first-person subject pronoun 『I』 to maintain narrative consistency, and according to English subject-verb agreement rules, when the subject changes from the third-person 〈she〉 to the first-person 〈I〉, the original third-person singular verb form 〈has〉 is no longer applicable and needs to be changed to the base form 『have』, finally forming the correct structure 『I have』 to comply with English grammar rules.

error_sentence: On Monday afternoon, she has lunch, then she goes to school again.
correct_sentence: On Monday afternoon, I have lunch, and then go to school again.
error: then she goes
correction: and then go
error_type: Conjunction Error
error_severity: 5
error_description: ① Conjunction Error: According to English parallel structure rules, when listing three or more consecutive actions (get up, have breakfast, go to school), the conjunction 『and』 is required to connect the last two items. Therefore, the conjunction 『and』 should be added between 〈have breakfast〉 and 〈go to school〉, forming 『I get up, have breakfast, and go to school』 to comply with English rules for parallel sentence structures; ② Pronoun Error: The original sentence has a pronoun conflict, mixing the first-person 〈I〉 from earlier with the subsequent 〈she〉. Based on the principle of narrative consistency, the third-person subject 〈she〉 should be completely deleted, continuing the logic of the preceding first-person subject, and according to subject-verb agreement, when 〈she〉 is deleted, the implied subject is still 〈I〉, so the original third-person singular verb 〈goes〉 must be changed to the first-person base form 『go』, finally corrected to 『I get up, have breakfast, and go to school』 to satisfy both grammatical accuracy and expressive coherence.

error_sentence: On Monday evening, she goes home.
correct_sentence: On Monday evening, I go home.
error: she goes
correction: I go
error_type: Pronoun Error
error_severity: 3
error_description: Pronoun Error: Based on the principle of pronoun consistency in context, the first-person narrative perspective 〈I'm Tina〉 was established at the beginning, but the subsequent third-person pronoun 〈she〉 conflicts with the main narrative perspective; therefore, the pronoun 〈she〉 is changed to the first-person subject pronoun 『I』 to maintain narrative consistency, and according to English subject-verb agreement rules, when the subject changes from the third-person 〈she〉 to the first-person 〈I〉, the original third-person singular verb form 〈goes〉 is no longer applicable and needs to be changed to the base form 『go』, finally forming the correct structure 『I get』 to comply with English grammar rules.