Student essay written in en (native language: French, CEFR level: B1, field of study: Sciences de l'education)

Mister, Miss,
I'm sending you this letter for a study project in another country. I want to spend a year in Paris to learn the Korean language and to discovered a new learning method. I have for project to work as a French teacher in Paris after my University and it's why I want to spend a year in Paris. I want to improve my Korean language and my skills in the teaching field.
To realize this project I need a bourse to pay an apartment and the school. I am motivate to learn a new language and to meet new people. I will do my best to have good marks and to learn new things.
I hope this letter will show you how I am determinate and motivated to go abroad and to appropriate the Korean culture and language.
Looking forward to your response I thank you in advance Mister, Miss for the care you will make of the reading of my letter.
Warmly.