Question: These are just a few suggestions which mistakes to avoid when creating a window display but improving the shopping windows design always depends on the kind of goods your business sells and what budget has been assigned to visual marketing activities
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Fixed: [These are just a few suggestions which mistakes to avoid when creating a window display, but improving the shopping windows design always depends on the kind of goods your business sells and what budget has been assigned to visual marketing activities.]

Question: Description Slendertone electrodes for abdominal belts
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Fixed: [Description: Slendertone electrodes for abdominal belts]

Question: About this time a revolt broke out in the Roman province of Armenian led by a prince from the Parthian Empire Persia
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Fixed: [About this time a revolt broke out in the Roman province of Armenian led by a prince from the Parthian Empire (Persia).]

Question: and when we cried to Yahweh he heard our voice and sent an angel and brought us forth out of Egypt and behold we are in Kadesh a city in the uttermost of your border
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[and when we cried to Yahweh, he heard our voice, and sent an angel, and brought us forth out of Egypt: and, behold, we are in Kadesh, a city in the uttermost of your border.]