QUES: Look through this glass Gerda said he And every flake seemed larger and appeared like a magnificent flower or beautiful star it was splendid to look at

correct the punctuation.

CORRECTED: Look through this glass, Gerda, said he. And every flake seemed larger, and appeared like a magnificent flower, or beautiful star; it was splendid to look at!

QUES: This breed can have eyes of any color including mismatched eyes

correct the punctuation.

CORRECTED: This breed can have eyes of any color, including mismatched eyes.

QUES: It is this condition of fate we must term macrocosmic fate

correct the punctuation.

CORRECTED:
It is this condition of fate we must term "macrocosmic fate".