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The New York composer Derek Bermel has created the work Cabaret Songs for FIGURA Derek Bermel has been hailed across the globe for his creativity and theatricality as a composer of chamber symphonic dance theater and pop works and his virtuosity and charisma as a clarinetist conductor and jazz and rock musician
The New York composer Derek Bermel has created the work Cabaret Songs for FIGURA. Derek Bermel has been hailed across the globe for his creativity and theatricality as a composer of chamber, symphonic, dance, theater, and pop works, and his virtuosity and charisma as a clarinetist, conductor, and jazz and rock musician.