Problem: What happens next in this paragraph?

One by one, they squat down, grab the weight, stand, and lift it over their heads before dropping it. the seventh man
A: fails on his first try, and drops the weight before raising it overhead.

Problem: What happens next in this paragraph?

A man is standing a table while a woman is sitting in a chair. Then we see a man talking while riding a recumbent bike. the man
A: leans forward before sitting back down.

Problem: What happens next in this paragraph?

Two men outside in the woods while one man wearing a knit cap balances on a rope tied across two trees while one man with a black beard supports the man with the knit cap. the man with the beard
A: releases the man on the rope and moves away.

Problem: What happens next in this paragraph?

How to write an author assessment
Understand the purpose of your author assessment.
Your assessment should never try to change the author's style toward your own style. However, you may have different goals based on the reason you are assessing the author.
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If you are being asked by an unpublished writer to critique their work, you must focus on giving positive critiques as well as identifying areas that need work. If the assessment is being done in a teaching capacity, make the assessment a careful critique that encourages the writer to take a certain direction in their next draft.