IN: Yeeeeeah ! ! ! " That was one of the best swims for my board I have ever done . I had a big smile on my face all the way , because I knew that soon I would be doing more of those .
who is the narrator with ?

OUT: the narrator is with someone who works for the board overseeing him

IN: A little part of him held out hope , though ; he knew he and Jack , although ten years apart in age , were a good match . He sat forward again and looked down at the bench ; the players ' backs were to him , and he saw the guys moving around . Ennis stood behind the players with the coaches , but Brady noticed that his hand rested on Jack 's shoulder pads and he made no effort to hide or move it . I ' m fucked , thought Brady .
What may happen to Brady in relation to this game ?

OUT: Brady is unlikely to win the game .

IN: Whether or not it does , I laughed ( and winced ) many times in recognition . Jack 's friend Murray -- who aspires to do with Elvis what Gladney did for Hitler -- is a particularly well - drawn character , with a lovely habit of delivering entire paragraphs of semi - deconstructionist thought as he wanders through the supermarket . Those of you who know and love my junior year of college roommate -- who 's well on her way to becoming a professor these days -- will definitely see a resemblance . Still , I ' m not so far away from those days that I did n't enjoy the romp tremendously .
What may be the romp I so tremendously enjoyed ?

OUT:
I was reading a story written by someone I knew , whose characters were based on people I know .