IN: He doubled up in her arms , then went limp . His body rolled over , his face wedging in the roots of a drift stump . Rin struggled to turn him over again ; small pebbles stuck to the bared front of his body . One hand still clamped over the broad smear of blood .
What happened to the man who lay dead next to Rin .

OUT: Rin stabbed him in the chest .

IN: I was supposed to be packing today , but Eileen came in and messed all my things up . Honestly . She ought to know better . She 's nine , after all .
What is the narrator supposed to be doing ?

OUT: They are supposed to be gathering things together .

IN: I hate being used like that its stupid and just playing with feelings with one another . oh and there are some people that i use to call friends are ignoring me for some reason . they do nt respond to me what so ever . so i gave up on them .
What might have happened before I felt used ?

OUT:
My friends did not want to talk to me anymore