goodybag/website-panel — pull request #90 by ProCynic (2013-06-18 23:04:44+00:00)
Title: Privacy Policy

To administer a contest, promotion, survey [ADD A COMMA HERE] or other site feature.

To send periodic emails. (The email address you provide for order processing, [DELETE COMMA HERE] may be used to send you information and updates pertaining to your order, in addition to receiving [DELETE "RECEIVING" HERE] occasional company news, updates, related product or service information, etc.)

We offer the use of a secure server. All supplied sensitive/credit information is transmitted via Secure Socket Layer (SSL) technology and then encrypted into our Payment [LOWER CASE P FOR PAYMENT] gateway providers [ADD APOSTROPHE FOR "PROVIDER'S"] database only to be accessible {ACCESSED] by those authorized with special access rights to such systems, and [DELETE ", AND" AND REPLACE WITH "WHO"] are required to keep the information confidential.

Yes. Cookies are small files that a site or its service provider transfers to your computers [POSSESSIVE: COMPUTER'S] hard drive through your Web browser (if you allow ["ALLOW" I MEAN, "Allow" in quotation marks, b/c that's what you click on]) that enables the sites or service providers systems [AGAIN, POSSESSIVE FOR BOTH: "site's or ... provider's"] to recognize your browser and capture and remember certain information. We use cookies to understand and save your preferences for future visits and compile aggregate data about site traffic and site interaction so that we can offer better site experiences and tools in the future [DELETE "IN THE FUTURE"].

We may also release your information when we believe release is appropriate to comply with the law, enforce our site policies, or protect ours [NOT "OURS" BUT "OUR" -- READ IT TOGETHER W/ "RIGHTS": "ours rights" - DOESN'T WORK] or others [POSSESSIVE, WHETHER IT'S SINGULAR OR PLURAL: "other's" or "others'"] rights, property, or safety.

THIRD PARTY LINKS ["THIRD-PARTY" - HYPHENATED]

or offer third party [HYPHENATED: "third-party"] products or services on our website. These third party [HYPHENATED: "third-party"] sites

Because we value your privacy [INSERT COMMA] we have taken the necessary precautions

the 'Profile View/Edit' page. [WHERE THE HECK IS THAT? I CAN'T EVEN FIND IT!!! MAYBE MAKE IT CLICK-ONABLE?]

We are in compliance with the requirements of COPPA (Children’s Online Privacy Protection Act), [THIS IS A RUN-ON SENTENCE. PUT A COLON HERE AND CAP THE FOLLOWING "W" IN "We"] we do not collect any information from anyone under 13 years of age. Our website, products [INSERT COMMA] and services are all directed to people [DELETE "PEOPLE" AND REPLACE WITH "INDIVIDUALS"] who are at least 13 years old or older.

This online privacy policy applies only to information collected through our website and not to information collected offline. [AM CONFUSED BY THIS SECTION. SEEMS LIKE IT SHOULD READ SOMETHING LIKE THIS:

PRIVACY POLICY FOR ONLINE USE ONLY
This Privacy Policy [NOTE THE USE OF CAPS] applies only to information collected online through our website and not to information collected offline.

Please also visit our Terms and Conditions section establishing the use, disclaimers, and limitations of liability governing the use of our website at www.goodybag.com & [DELETE TEH AMPERSAND!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! REPLACE WITH "and"] biz.goodybag.com. [ALSO, WHERE IS THE "TERMS AND CONDITIONS" SECTION? i CAN'T FIND IT BESIDES HERE -- MAYBE MAKE IT CLICK-ONABLE?]

By using our site, you consent to our online privacy policy. [DELETE "ONLINE" AND CAP BOTH P'S: "Privacy Policy" -- WE'VE ALREADY ESTABLISHED THAT THIS PRIVACY POLICY IS FOR ONLINE USE ONLY -- DON'T NEED TO SAY AGAIN]

If we decide to change our privacy policy [CAP BOTH "Privacy Policy"], we will post those [CHANGE "THOSE" TO "ANY" OR "SAID"] changes on [CHANGE "ON" TO "TO" -- POST TO THE PAGE] this page, and/or update the Privacy Policy modification date below.

This policy was last modified on 9/18/2012 [ADD PERIOD] [WAS THAT REALLY THE LAST TIME THIS WAS UPDATED?]

CONTACTING [CHANGE TO "CONTACT"] US

If there are [THE VOICE CHANGES HERE, AND IT'S WEIRD. KEEP THE SAME VOICE: "If you have"] any questions regarding this privacy policy [CAP BOTH: "Privacy Policy"] you may contact us using the information below. [DELETE "INFORMATION BELOW" AND THE ATTACHED PERIOD AND INSERT COLON SO IT READS: "using the following:"]

https://trello.com/c/fnG7ang8