themanaworld/tmwa-server-data — pull request #13 by DinoPaskvan (2013-04-19 18:01:58+00:00)
Title: Fixes for Golbenez NPC

Apart from fixing typos and grammatical errors (most notably the lack of apostrophes in possessive forms), I have made a couple of point of view corrections. An example would be the statement that Golbenez decides to ignore you. From a player's point of view, you would lack the necessary insight into what Golbenez is actually thinking to know that he decided on something. Instead, you just see him ignoring you.

Also, I changed the tone of Golbenez's dialogue, making it more formal, as that seems more appropriate for a demonic being, and also increases the contrast in unexpected situations, making for a more humorous setting when he i.e. asks for a cake.
Finally, I tried to make the language flow more naturally overall.