JBB/jgc-web2 — Issue #61: Proofing syntax feedback for California Alternative Education Research Project
Author: ogurantz
Created: 2012-01-20 21:50:13+00:00
State: open

Syntax/typo:
- Initial “Plus” needs to be capitalized.

Overall:
- I think the description really needs work. It starts with PLUS (the first line is a bit tough to get through - too long), then says "this is one part of a bigger project). I think it should say "Researchers are studying alt ed. This is why it's important" and then go to "PLUS is one example of work we've done". It should let people anticipate (with not too much detail) what they might find in the "Intake" and "Alternative Options" briefs, right now it's not clear.

- I don't like the word "we" as in "we interviewed". I would use "researchers interviewed" instead.