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== Chapter 37 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
PLOTHOLE 	7 fidelius problem 	 	
and a general mad Weasley dash 	and a general mad Weasley-dash 	 	
obviously you'll be one day 	obviously you'll be one, one day
Alternative solution:
I mean, one day you'll obviously be one too, but I still know her best.	 	
and beside his newly 	and beside him, his newly 	 	
She doesn't look much 	She doesn't look like much 	 	
fraud who lived 	fraud-who-lived 	 	
It can't be John Potter 	It can't be, John Potter 	Alternative: It can't be... John Potter	
Lady Lily Potter, of the Ancient and Noble house of Potter."	Lady Lily Potter, of the Ancient and Noble House of Potter."	 	
ripped apart for safe keeping 	ripped apart for safekeeping 	Should be one word 	
the month long process 	the month-long process 	Hyphen 	
worst stain-glass window 	worst stained-glass window 	Not sure 	
just one middle-finger 	just one middle finger 	Remove hyphen 	
behind a secret passage-way 	behind a secret passageway 	Should be one word 	
the seventh year Hufflepuff girl's shower room 	the seventh-year Hufflepuff girls' shower room 	Add hyphen and move apostrophe 	
the Ravenclaw girl's changing room 	the Ravenclaw girls' changing room 	Move apostrophe 	
jerking his thumb in direction 	jerking his thumb in the direction 	Missing word 	
the Slytherin sixth-year girl's dormitory 	the Slytherin sixth-year girls' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
I believe, my own views align 	I believe my own views align 	Remove comma? 	
many muggle practises 	many muggle practices 	Noun form 	
Might I enquire as to how 	Might I inquire as to how 	Typo 	
to the wide open doors 	to the wide-open doors 	Hyphen 	
the half furnished ballroom 	the half-furnished ballroom 	Hyphen 	
Moment's later, the doors stopped 	Moments later, the doors stopped 	Remove apostrophe 	
Between them, ran lines 	Between them ran lines 	Remove comma? 	
faintly glowing gray powder 	faintly glowing grey powder 	Typo 	
hastily scrawled hand writing 	hastily scrawled handwriting 	Should be one word 	
A live grass hopper 	A live grasshopper 	Should be one word 	
consulted the purple trimmed book 	consulted the purple-trimmed book 	Hyphen 	
the Granger's country house 	the Grangers' country house 	Move apostrophe 	
A few minutes later Mister Granger opened it 	A few minutes later, Mister Granger opened it 	Comma 	
the fact that Slytherin manor stood 	the fact that Slytherin Manor stood 	Capitalize 	
the goblin-ministry check point 	the goblin-ministry checkpoint 	Should be one word 	
held together with duct-tape 	held together with duct tape 	Remove hyphen 	
Of the Submarine? 	Of the submarine? 	Lowercase 	
single handedly faced down 	single-handedly faced down 	Hyphen 	
declaration of intention 	declaration of intent 	Multiple occurrences 	
build my space ship first 	build my spaceship first 	Should be one word 	
powder from the mantle piece 	powder from the mantlepiece 	Should be one word 	
"…that is why we pushed 	"…That is why we pushed 	Capitalize 	
the now vacant chair 	the now-vacant chair 	Hyphen 	
moved onto other things 	moved on to other things 	Should be two words 	
bills to the wizengamot 	bills to the Wizengamot 	Capitalize 	
his grand daughter 	his granddaughter 	Should be one word 	
Lord Slytherin, Sir." 	Lord Slytherin, sir." 	Lowercase 	
door to the anti-chamber 	door to the antechamber 	Typo 	
to pour himself an apple-juice 	to pour himself apple juice 	Remove hyphen and "an" 	
the apple-juice filled brandy glass 	the apple-juice-filled brandy glass 	Hyphen 	
the rest of the apple-juice 	the rest of the apple juice 	Remove hyphen 	
to drown-out the taste 	to drown out the taste 	Remove hyphen 	
a lightning bolt shaped scar 	a lightning-bolt-shaped scar 	Two hyphens 	
the true boy who lived 	the true boy-who-lived 	Two hyphens 	
many comfy arm-chairs 	many comfy armchairs 	Should be one word 	
the edge of said arm-chair 	the edge of said armchair 	Should be one word 	
finger tip 	fingertip 	Multiple occurrences 	
lingering, side-ways look 	lingering, sideways look 	Should be one word 	
The far away door shut 	The faraway door shut 	Should be one word 	
a still unexplained mystery 	a still-unexplained mystery 	Hyphen 	
a 'boy who lived' adventure book 	a 'Boy-Who-Lived' adventure book 	Capitalize and hyphenate 	
The lawyer said that 'boy who lived' 	The lawyer said that 'Boy-Who-Lived' 	Capitalize and hyphenate 	
You're doing what ever it is 	You're doing whatever it is 	Should be one word 	
dementor filled hell 	dementor-filled hell 	Hyphen 	
an recognisable impression 	a recognisable impression 	Typo 	
his otherwise serious face 	his otherwise-serious face 	Hyphen 	
a very pretty muggle born girl 	a very pretty muggleborn girl 	Should be one word 	
closing the dining room door 	closing the dining-room door 	Hyphen 	
shelves of boy who lived adventure books 	shelves of Boy-Who-Lived adventure books 	Capitalize and hyphenate 	
written S.W.O.T in neat curly writing 	written S.W.O.T. in neat curly writing 	Add period 	
a whippy looking cane 	a whippy-looking cane 	Hyphen 	
the one's that make people 	the ones that make people 	Remove apostrophe 	
a single long blond hair 	a single long blonde hair 	Typo 	
Harry arrived in twelve Grimmauld place 	Harry arrived in twelve Grimmauld Place 	Capitalize 	
his fifteen inch yew 	his fifteen-inch yew 	Hyphen 	
chamber/chamber of secrets 	Chamber/Chamber of Secrets 	Multiple occurrences 	
where upon he started casting 	whereupon he started casting 	Should be one word 	
some heavy duty enchantments 	some heavy-duty enchantments 	Hyphen 	
start second guessing myself 	start second-guessing myself 	Hyphen 	
the twin's partnership 	the twins' partnership 	Move apostrophe 	
Large scale projects would drain us 	Large-scale projects would drain us 	Hyphen 	
into her ice blue eyes 	into her ice-blue eyes 	Hyphen 	
over to the black board 	over to the blackboard 	Should be one word 	
a serene looking Luna 	a serene-looking Luna 	Hyphen 	
the corner that lead to the house 	the corner that led to the house 	Typo 	
where upon it immediately 	whereupon it immediately 	Should be one word 	
the best year—what with being grounded, but I don't 	the best year—what with you being grounded—but I don't 	Change to em-dash and add missing word?	
to your friends houses 	to your friends' houses 	Apostrophe 	
manned by a half dozen wizards 	manned by a half-dozen wizards 	Hyphen 	
a second hand clothes shop 	a secondhand clothes shop 	Should be one word 	
"I…I…" Hermione buried 	"I… I…" Hermione buried 	Space 	
equally battered looking cauldrons 	equally battered-looking cauldrons 	Hyphen 	
ice-cream 	ice cream 	Multiple occurrences 	
ducking into a side-alley 	ducking into a side alley 	Remove hyphen 	
yew, phoenix feather — 	yew, phoenix feather —" 	Add closing quote 	
the dozens of book shelves 	the dozens of bookshelves 	Should be one word 	
in a fold up mirror 	in a fold-up mirror 	Hyphen 	
The Boy Who Lived and the Three Headed Crup 	The Boy-Who-Lived and the Three-Headed Crup 	Three hyphens 	
THE BOY WHO LIVED AND THE MUMMY'S WRATH! 	THE BOY-WHO-LIVED AND THE MUMMY'S WRATH! 	Two hyphens 	
AN ALL NEW ADVENTURE 	AN ALL-NEW ADVENTURE 	Hyphen 	
Oh, the boy who lived series 	Oh, the Boy-Who-Lived series 	Capitalize and hyphenate 	
Not to worry! After all.. 	Not to worry! After all… 	Change two periods to ellipses 	
I am Gilderoy Lockhart, order of Mer— 	I am Gilderoy Lockhart, Order of Mer— 	Capitalize 	
Luna's low heeled shoes 	Luna's low-heeled shoes 	Hyphen 	
Up, up ,up. 	Up, up, up. 	Move comma 	
The door bell ting-aling-alinged 	The doorbell ting-aling-alinged 	Should be one word 	
to accept an order of Merlin 	to accept an Order of Merlin 	Capitalize? 	
a three-foot thick concrete bunker 	a three-foot-thick concrete bunker 	Hyphen 	
half way 	halfway 	Multiple occurrences 	
picking her self up 	picking herself up 	Should be one word 	
the balcony at Quibbler headquarters 	the balcony at Quibbler Headquarters 	Capitalize 	
from Year With A Yeti 	from Year With A Yeti 	Italics 	
wrapped around fantastical story telling 	wrapped around fantastical storytelling 	Should be one word 	
straight out the old Tom's head 	straight out of old Tom's head 	Typo 	
ever since Old Tom learned 	ever since old Tom learned 	Lowercase 	
need to quickly re-establish 	need to quickly reestablish 	Should be one word 	
A well written best-selling book 	A well-written best-selling book 	Hyphen 	
Best Selling Author 	Best-Selling Author 	Hyphen 	
space in-between 	space in between 	Remove hyphen 	
from three book shelves up 	from three bookshelves up 	Should be one word 	
trying to clear it. " 	trying to clear it. 	Remove extraneous quote 	
a swam of butterflies 	a swarm of butterflies 	Typo 	
the witch's public bathroom 	the witches' public bathroom 	Make plural 	
There weren't any problems were there? 	There weren't any problems, were there? 	Comma 	
start worshiping you 	start worshipping you 	Typo 	
unseen by either boy. A short figure creeped closer. 	unseen by either boy, a short figure crept closer. 	Change to comma and fix typo 	
normal eleven year old 	normal eleven-year-old 	Two hyphens 	
to peer into girl's heads 	to peer into girls' heads 	Move apostrophe 	
one had a lightning bolt scar 	one had a lightning-bolt scar 	Hyphen 	
tried not to breath 	tried not to breathe 	Typo 	
Then you're fine aren't you? 	Then you're fine, aren't you? 	Comma 	
the book signing table 	the book-signing table 	Hyphen 	
my best selling book series 	my best-selling book series 	Hyphen 	
With every additional sentence the crowd's reaction 	With every additional sentence, the crowd's reaction 	Comma 	
a still living body 	a still-living body 	Hyphen 	
A short figure creeped closer 	A short figure crept closer 	Typo 	
Virgo/Julia's thoughts 	"best to standardise on just italics", according to you 	Consistency 	
== Chapter 38 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
metal notes 	mental notes 	 	
master spell swatting her progressed quite far 	master spell swatting had progressed quite far 	 	
End of Chapter Thirty-Seven 	End of Chapter Thirty-Eight 	 	
platform nine and three-quarters 	Platform Nine and Three-Quarters 	Two occurrences 	
his eleven year old daughter 	his eleven-year-old daughter 	Hyphens 	
cat carrying container 	cat-carrying container 	Hyphen 	
stood in the door way 	stood in the doorway 	Should be one word 	
A bored sounding female voice 	A bored-sounding female voice 	Hyphen 	
this is all very interesting," 	this is all very interesting." 	Change to period 	
A blond girl her age 	A blonde girl her age 	Typo 	
entrances to the chamber 	entrances to the Chamber 	Capitalize 	
a sixteen year old Riddle, not a seventy year old Riddle	a sixteen-year-old Riddle, not a seventy-year-old Riddle	Hyphens 	
a non committal head wobble 	a non-committal head wobble 	Hyphen 	
froze in mid argument 	froze in mid-argument 	Hyphen 	
a blasting sixty mile an hour wind 	a blasting sixty-mile-an-hour wind 	Not sure 	
donned the invisibly cloak 	donned the invisibility cloak 	Typo 	
the oxygen recycling plate 	the oxygen-recycling plate 	Hyphen 	
along-side several hundred 	alongside several hundred 	Should be one word 	
tight-fitting ear muffs 	tight-fitting earmuffs 	Should be one word 	
Mister Slytherin?" Their guide asked. 	Mister Slytherin?" their guide asked. 	Lowercase 	
dozens more muggles, were eating 	dozens more muggles were eating 	Remove comma 	
"Summer fruits wine, Sir." 	"Summer fruits wine, sir." 	Lowercase 	
the department of trade 	the Department of Trade 	Capitalize 	
no problems with that, per say, 	no problems with that, per se, 	Typo 	
your unasked for interventions 	your unasked-for interventions 	Hyphen 	
inspected it as thought 	inspected it as though 	Typo 	
murdered by you-know-who 	murdered by You-Know-Who 	Capitalize 	
no eleven year old could 	no eleven-year-old could 	Hyphens 	
cotton onto your twin sons 	cotton on to your twin sons 	Should be two words 	
as thought waiting for 	as though waiting for 	Typo 	
magical being from who 	magical being from whom 	Typo 	
the department of mys— 	the Department of Mys— 	Capitalize 	
her low heeled shoes 	her low-heeled shoes 	Hyphen 	
the sock clad appendage 	the sock-clad appendage 	Hyphen 	
the otherwise empty compartmen 	the otherwise-empty compartmen 	Hyphen 	
you being The Gray Lord 	you being the Gray Lord 	Lowercase 	
to let his grand daughter 	to let his granddaughter 	Should be one word 	
along side my title 	alongside my title 	Should be one word 	
founder's club 	Founders Club 	Remove apostrophe and capitalize for consistency. Multiple occurrences	
the muggle born support group 	the muggleborn support group 	Should be one word 	
the first year muggleborns 	the first-year muggleborns 	Hyphen 	
squeaky, photography obsessed boy 	squeaky, photography-obsessed boy 	Hyphen 	
a lower class muggle family 	a lower-class muggle family 	Hyphen 	
an average looking boy 	an average-looking boy 	Hyphen 	
an already bustling compartment 	an already-bustling compartment 	Hyphen 	
the second and first year muggleborns 	the second- and first-year muggleborns 	Hyphens 	
one fourth year Hufflepuff 	one fourth-year Hufflepuff 	Hyphen 	
Can't say anymore than that 	Can't say any more than that 	Should be two words 	
work around Quidditch practise 	work around Quidditch practice 	Noun form 	
the non-first year muggleborns 	the non-first-year muggleborns 	Hyphen 	
mass of black clad students 	mass of black-clad students 	Hyphen 	
John Potter creeped through the crowd 	John Potter crept through the crowd 	Typo 	
group of other first year girls 	group of other first-year girls 	Hyphen 	
towards the first year boats 	towards the first-year boats 	Hyphen 	
possessed-by-the-dark-lord 	possessed-by-the-Dark-Lord 	Capitalize? 	
their eleven year old classmate 	their eleven-year-old classmate 	Hyphens 	
A stern faced witch 	A stern-faced witch 	Hyphen 	
A twelve foot tall banner 	A twelve-foot-tall banner 	Hyphens 	
the smiling, blonde abomination 	the smiling, blond abomination 	Typo 	
a few student's names 	a few students' names 	Move apostrophe 	
were sorting into Slytherin 	were sorted into Slytherin 	Typo 	
the hooked nosed man 	the hook-nosed man 	Hyphen and typo 	
your ripped apart your soul 	you ripped apart your soul 	Typo 	
following her parents orders 	following her parents' orders 	Apostrophe 	
"Boys and Girls!" 	"Boys and girls!" 	Lowercase? 	
staring at the Headmaster 	staring at the headmaster 	Lowercase 	
five times winner 	five-time winner 	Hyphen and remove "s" 	
famous best selling author 	famous best-selling author 	Hyphen 	
maybe not." Harry answered 	maybe not," Harry answered 	Change to comma 	
a reluctant looking John 	a reluctant-looking John 	Hyphen 	
another long winded speech 	another long-winded speech 	Hyphen 	
the first year students 	the first-year students 	Hyphen 	
The boys dormitories 	The boys' dormitories 	Apostrophe 	
allowed in the girl's dormitory 	in the girls' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
sleep in the girls dormitory 	sleep in the girls' dormitory 	Apostrophe 	
whatever gender based trap 	whatever gender-based trap 	Hyphen 	
ducked into the first year girls dormitory 	ducked into the first-year girls-dormitory 	Hyphen and apostrophe 	
curtains around his four poster 	curtains around his four-poster 	Hyphen 	
the Slytherin first year girls' dormitory 	the Slytherin first-year girls' dormitory 	Hyphen 	
The almost invisible spells 	The almost-invisible spells 	Hyphen 	
each tiny magical build up 	each tiny magical build-up 	Hyphen 	
ritual enhanced strength 	ritual-enhanced strength 	Hyphen 	
in an almost grumpy tone of voice she said 	in an almost-grumpy tone of voice, she said 	Hyphen and comma 	
climbed into her four poster 	climbed into her four-poster 	Hyphen 	
a third year silencing charm 	a third-year silencing charm 	Hyphen 	
Virgo/Julia's thoughts 	"best to standardise on just italics", according to you 	Consistency 	
== Chapter 39 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
If you ever change your mind, 	"If you ever change your mind, 	 	
Neither. 	Me neither. 	 	
to wear Ginny was already asleep 	to where Ginny was already asleep 	 	
twin muggleborns from Hufflepuff house arrived 	twin muggleborns from Hufflepuff House arrived 	 	
I stand out too much their going to think 	I stand out too much they're going to think 	 	
gold four poster bed 	gold four-poster bed 	Hyphen 	
The Heir of the Potter family 	The heir of the Potter family 	Lowercase 	
Lilly 	Lily 	Multiple occurrences 	
crap covered, central table 	crap-covered, central table 	Hyphen 	
dirty blond hair 	dirty-blonde hair 	Typo and hyphen 	
ask your advise 	ask your advice 	Noun form 	
my father could choose to contract me if he so chooses 	my father could contract me if he so chooses 	Change one of the two "chooses" 	
Not really, of-course 	Not really, of course 	Remove hyphen 	
Draco looked pensieve 	Draco looked pensive 	Typo 	
and non magic tickling 	and non-magic tickling 	Hyphen 	
"Good Morning, Harry." 	"Good morning, Harry." 	Lowercase 	
no earth shattering pronouncements 	no earth-shattering pronouncements 	Hyphen 	
"The inner-eye, Luna." 	"The inner eye, Luna." 	Remove hyphen 	
History of Magic 	history of magic 	Multiple occurrences 	nei, subjects are capitalized
whose note taking was as neat 	whose note-taking was as neat 	Hyphen 	
The bell for Lunch rang 	The bell for lunch rang 	Lowercase 	
in-between 	in between 	Multiple occurrences 	
every-time she glanced at her. 	every time she glanced at her. 	Remove hyphen 	
Her teddybear floated off to one side 	Her teddy bear floated off to one side 	Should be two word 	
that of a sixteen year old 	that of a sixteen-year-old 	Hyphens 	
She flipped her pony-tail 	She flipped her ponytail 	Should be one word 	
about half way around 	about halfway around 	Should be one word 	
house-elves have taken it 	house elves have taken it 	Remove hyphen 	
eleven year old girl 	an eleven-year-old girl 	Multiple occurrences 	
The other Gryffindor first-years 	The other Gryffindor first years 	Remove hyphen 	
Harry's most hard-working 	Harry's most hardworking 	Should be one word 	
an ever changing, ever growing beast 	an ever-changing, ever-growing beast 	Hyphens 	
These are the Dark Arts 	These are the dark arts 	Lowercase? 	
to handedly defend her position 	to handily defend her position 	Typo 	
unofficial muggleborn common-room 	unofficial muggleborn common room 	Remove hyphen 	
first founders' club meeting 	first Founders Club meeting 	For consistency 	
their class-mates arrived 	their classmates arrived 	Should be one word 	
muggleborns had shown-up 	muggleborns had shown up 	Remove hyphen 	
Daphne's Grandmother 	Daphne's grandmother 	Lowercase 	
rather basic mind-scape 	rather basic mindscape 	Should be one word 	
followers and hanger-ons.Virgo closed his eyes 	followers and hangers-on. Virgo closed his eyes 	Move "s", and add space 	
to the girl's dormitory 	to the girls' dormitory 	Multiple occurrences 	
equality as ornate as the room 	equally as ornate as the room 	Typo 	
sat half way down the table 	sat halfway down the table 	Should be one word 	
the Headmaster 	the headmaster 	Multiple occurrences 	
These one time use necklaces 	These one-time-use necklaces 	Hyphens 	
The chairman, Ambrosius Flume stood up. 	The chairman, Ambrosius Flume, stood up. 	Comma 	
moustache twirlingly obvious 	moustache-twirlingly obvious 	Hyphen 	
still unopened portkey box 	still-unopened portkey box 	Hyphen 	
Four out of Eleven 	four out of eleven 	Lowercase 	
the still blank looking Lucius 	the still-blank-looking Lucius 	Hyphens 	
Four out of Eleven [...] All the other hands rose. [...] Four to five, the motion is rejected	Four to seven, the motion is rejected 	Math 	
Let's move onto other business 	Let's move on to other business 	Should be two words 	
a long held tension 	a long-held tension 	Hyphen 	
Several Lords around Malfoy 	Several lords around Malfoy 	Lowercase 	
started at the empty box 	stared at the empty box 	Typo 	
my responsibility as Chief Auror 	my responsibility as chief auror 	Lowercase 	
two instant access portkeys 	two instant-access portkeys 	Hyphen 	
an empty class-room 	an empty classroom 	Should be one word 	
survive the smack down 	survive the smackdown 	Should be one word 	
after-all 	after all 	Multiple occurrences 	
his house mates had pranked him 	his housemates had pranked him 	Should be one word 	
classes with the Bones Heiress 	classes with the Bones heiress 	Lowercase 	
guarantee that his other-self 	guarantee that his other self 	Remove hyphen 	
piles of second hand books 	piles of secondhand books 	Should be one word 	
By the fire place 	By the fireplace 	Should be one word 	
his now trembling voice 	his now-trembling voice 	Hyphen 	
Hufflepuffs had duelling practise 	Hufflepuffs had duelling practice 	Noun form 	
"No." Virgo said 	"No," Virgo said 	Change to comma 	
Aww, C'mon Cedric 	Aww, c'mon Cedric 	Lowercase 	
be a Hufflepuff ?" 	be a Hufflepuff?" 	Remove space before question mark 	
It's my house mates 	It's my housemates 	Should be one word 	
a first year prodigy 	a first-year prodigy 	Hyphen 	
A cheerful sounding female voice 	A cheerful-sounding female voice 	Hyphen 	
a tall, blonde man 	a tall, blond man 	Typo 	
The higher ups are fed up 	The higher-ups are fed up 	Hyphen 	
only well off travellers 	only well-off travellers 	Hyphen 	
occupied with the cross-word 	occupied with the crossword 	Should be one word 	
Excuse me, Ma'am 	Excuse me, ma'am 	Lowercase 	
"One-fifteen, Sir." 	"One-fifteen, sir." 	Lowercase 	
which is obviously what they were 	which was obviously what they were 	Wrong tense 	
the Washington monument 	the Washington Monument 	Capitalize 	
JFK Centre 	JFK Center 	US spelling for a US building (Multiple occurrences) 	
another boring as heck shift 	another boring-as-heck shift 	Hyphens 	
"You, okay there, Derick?" 	"You okay there, Derick?" 	Remove comma 	
a self proclaimed pagan 	a self-proclaimed pagan 	Hyphen 	
the high security areas 	the high-security areas 	Hyphen 	
longer even than longest dragon skull 	longer even than the longest dragon skull 	Missing word 	
self opening and self-locking doors 	self-opening and self-locking doors 	Hyphen 	
see the Redskins' first game of the season just the other day 	Super minor nitpick - the NFL season doesn't usually start until early-to-mid September, and in 1992 specifically, the first Redskins game was the two days after this scene.	You could instead refer to an NFL preseason game, a different sport (e.g. baseball), or keep it the same because who the hell notices/cares about stuff like this	
and then further onto his 	and then further on to his 	Should be two words 	
being brought to bare 	being brought to bear 	Typo 	
Mr and Mrs. Lovegood 	Mr and Mrs Lovegood 	Remove period 	
Lovegoods trying Pizza 	Lovegoods trying pizza 	Lowercase 	
at one Washington's many 	at one of Washington's many 	Missing word 	
If anything their next attempt 	If anything, their next attempt 	Comma 	
They both paused mid rant 	They both paused mid-rant 	Hyphen 	
a second year book 	a second-year book 	Hyphen 	
the second year Hufflepuffs 	the second-year Hufflepuffs 	Hyphen 	
he had to remind herself 	he had to remind himself 	Typo 	
Virgo/Julia's thoughts 	"best to standardise on just italics", according to you 	Consistency 	
== Chapter 40 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
Potential Plothole 	, in chapter 40 the bloody baron is referred to as the head of Slytherin, then in chapter 43 Snape is referred to as her head of house when speaking to Alex implying he is head of Slytherin 	Not a plothole but rather a mistake in chapter 43 (jschr) 	
morning archery practise 	morning archery practice 	Noun form 	
a sixth year couple 	a sixth-year couple 	Hyphen 	
to the girl's dormitories 	to the girls' dormitories 	Move apostrophe 	
red headed girl 	redheaded girl 	Should be one word 	
the first years girls dormitory 	the first-year girls' dormitory 	Remove "s" and add apostrophe and hyphen 	
four poster 	four-poster 	Multiple occurrences 	
Black sat, crosslegged on the bed 	Black sat, cross-legged on the bed 	Hyphen 	
crossed out that line too and replaced it with 	crossed out that line too, and replaced it with 	Comma? 	
story book 	storybook 	Multiple occurrences 	
her father who Alex never saw 	her father whom Alex never saw 	Typo 	
the other day, Black." Draco said, mid round. 	the other day, Black," Draco said, mid-round. 	Comma and hyphen 	
finger tips 	fingertips 	Multiple occurrences 	
I know you want too 	I know you want to 	Typo 	
at the Marauder's map 	at the Marauder's Map 	Capitalize 	
at the O.K Corral. 	at the O.K. Corral. 	Period 	
for next years model 	for next year's model 	Apostrophe 	
"No indeed not." 	"No, indeed not." 	Comma? 	
rigorous self transfiguration 	rigorous self-transfiguration 	Hyphen 	
phoenix ashes ability 	phoenix ash's ability 	Apostrophe 	
half way 	halfway 	Multiple occurrences 	
a two headed cerberus 	a two-headed cerberus 	Hyphen 	
The twin's broke out 	The twins broke out 	Remove apostrophe 	
The twins exchanged looks then retreated 	The twins exchanged looks, then retreated 	Could also be "and then retreated", or "before retreating" 	
Yes, Quidditch tryouts 	Yes, quidditch tryouts 	Lowercase 	
That does sounds more likely 	That does sound more likely 	Typo 	
nimbus 2001 	Nimbus 2001 	Multiple occurrences 	
a brand new nimbus 2001 	a brand-new Nimbus 2001 	Capitalize and hyphen 	
"Very impressive." Alex said 	"Very impressive," Alex said 	Change to comma 	
make what needed to happen happen 	make what needed to happen, happen 	Comma 	
familiar looking brooms 	familiar-looking brooms 	Hyphen 	
Argus Filch, whom, despite 	Argus Filch, who, despite 	Typo 	
where ever 	wherever 	Multiple occurrences 	
out of bed students 	out-of-bed students 	Hyphens 	
a two-hundred galleon shrinkable trunk 	a two-hundred-galleon shrinkable trunk 	Hyphen 	
"the wand movement is 	"The wand movement is 	Capitalize 	
in a dimly-lit room 	in a dimly lit room 	Remove hyphen 	
an ear piercing scream 	an ear-piercing scream 	Hyphen 	
quicker than say, broomstick 	quicker than, say, broomstick 	Comma 	
Cornwall Academy drop out 	Cornwall Academy dropout 	Should be one word 	
a dust grey robe purpose made 	a dust-grey robe purpose-made 	Hyphens 	
in dust grey robes 	in dust-grey robes 	Hyphen 	
each foot step echoing 	each footstep echoing 	Should be one word 	
muggle born students 	muggleborn students 	Should be one word 	
one way 	one-way 	Multiple occurrences 	
"You heave't heard?" 	"You haven't heard?" 	Typo 	
the cork-board someone had pinned 	the corkboard, someone had pinned 	Comma and typo 	
cork board/cork-board 	corkboard 	Multiple occurrences 	
and hand written notes 	and handwritten notes 	Should be one word 	
One official looking paper 	One official-looking paper 	Hyphen 	
Long lost descendant 	Long-lost descendant 	Hyphen 	
other high ranking member 	other high-ranking member 	Hyphen 	
Non Human (half-breed) 	Non-human (half-breed) 	Hyphen and lowercase 	
Nicholas Flamel — 1:35 	Nicolas Flamel — 1:35 	Typo 	
those old fashioned toasters 	those old-fashioned toasters 	Hyphen 	
"My Lord! You can't just 	"My lord! You can't just 	Lowercase 	
forgot to breath 	forgot to breathe 	Typo 	
trip through the veil 	trip through the Veil 	Capitalize 	
to re-grow her eyes 	to regrow her eyes 	Should be one word 	
"My Lord?" Daphne asked 	"My lord?" Daphne asked 	Lowercase 	
the brain dead obvious one 	the brain-dead-obvious one 	Hyphens 	
not in anyway ambiguous 	not in any way ambiguous 	Should be two words 	
a financial wind fall 	a financial windfall 	Should be one word 	
re-ink her quill 	reink her quill 	Should be one word 	
council 	counsel 	Multiple occurrences 	
any thing we need to talk about 	anything we need to talk about 	Should be one word 	
the Slytherin Dungeons 	the Slytherin dungeons 	Lowercase 	
pouring over the marauders map 	pouring over the Marauder's Map 	Capitalize and apostrophe 	
headmaster Lockhart was pacing 	Headmaster Lockhart was pacing 	Capitalize 	
but once through sank into him 	but once through, sank into him 	Comma 	
Gryffindor first year girl's dormitory 	Gryffindor first-year girls' dormitory 	Multiple occurrences 	
the Diary still hadn't moved 	the diary still hadn't moved 	Lowercase 	
robot watch maker 	robot watchmaker 	Should be one word 	
pastel coloured patchwork quilts 	pastel-coloured patchwork quilts 	Hyphen 	
out without make-up 	out without makeup 	Should be one word 	
sitting crossed-legged 	sitting cross-legged 	Typo 	
Look there's an article 	Look, there's an article 	Comma 	
dark arts class." The girl with 	dark arts class." [new line] The girl with 	Different person speaking 	
My guardian's daughter 	My guardians' daughter 	Could be either 	
The three girl's looked at her 	The three girls looked at her 	Remove apostrophe 	
she knew full-well 	she knew full well 	Remove hyphen 	
Easily out-paced by a thirteen year old. 	Easily outpaced by a thirteen-year-old. 	Hyphens 	
a pingpong ball 	a ping-pong ball 	Hyphen 	
the Granger's house on Gairsay island 	the Grangers' house on Gairsay Island 	Move apostrophe and capitalize 	
the now piping hot meal 	the now-piping-hot meal 	Hyphens 	
in Knock-Turn Alley 	in Knockturn Alley 	Typo 	
the now proffered underwear 	the now-proffered underwear 	Hyphen 	
in a heart beat 	in a heartbeat 	Should be one word 	
a single compartment shrinking trunk 	a single-compartment shrinking trunk 	Hyphen 	
Before we begin. We need to 	Before we begin, we need to 	Change to comma? 	
Harry continued, "So when Draco 	Harry continued, "so when Draco 	Lowercase 	
a worried looking Hermione 	a worried-looking Hermione 	Hyphen 	
She dodged it be mere inches 	She dodged it by mere inches 	Typo 	
Everyone of them 	Every one of them 	Should be two words 	
with dagger like teeth 	with dagger-like teeth 	Hyphen 	
Potter was flying in mid air. 	Potter was flying in midair. 	Should be one word 	
She couldn't breath 	She couldn't breathe 	Typo 	
and batted from bruises 	and battered from bruises 	Typo 	
but the other's weren't important 	but the others weren't important 	Remove apostrophe 	
cold and hard any more 	cold and hard anymore 	Should be one word 	
the same jet black hair 	the same jet-black hair 	Hyphen 	
Monster's don't make good pets 	Monsters don't make good pets 	Remove apostrophe 	
the chamber of secrets 	the Chamber of Secrets 	Capitalize 	
the lightning bolt scar 	the lightning-bolt scar 	Hyphen 	
on Baby Harry's face 	on baby Harry's face 	Lowercase 	
an ever expanding river 	an ever-expanding river 	Hyphen 	
he-who-must-not-be-named 	He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named 	Capitalize 	
intercept the first year girl 	intercept the first-year girl 	Hyphen 	
"eleven, twelve, no, thirteen wizards 	"Eleven, twelve, no, thirteen wizards 	Capitalize 	
our little wizengamot 	our little Wizengamot 	Not sure 	
a well respected family 	a well-respected family 	Hyphen 	
to it's rightful status 	to its rightful status 	Remove apostrophe 	
an eleven year old girl 	an eleven-year-old girl 	Hyphens 	
Yes, It's surprising 	Yes, it's surprising 	Lowercase 	
a crying fourth year witch 	a crying fourth-year witch 	Hyphen 	
my family's linage 	my family's lineage 	Typo 	
ash from the fire place 	ash from the fireplace 	Should be one word 	
had gotten over enthusiastic 	had gotten over-enthusiastic 	Hyphen 	
it made it's way 	it made its way 	Remove apostrophe 	
in it's unwillingness 	in its unwillingness 	Remove apostrophe 	
the girl's bathroom 	the girls' bathroom 	Move apostrophe 	
a teenage dark lord 	a teenage Dark Lord 	Capitalize 	
If by this point you need to be told which witch was which, then you haven't been paying attention.	It could also be rephrased to something like "Anyone who was paying attention, would know which witch was witch." or "Which witch was witch, was obvious to anyone who was paying attention." The point is to remove the story immersion breaking speaking directly to the reader...	This breaks the flow of the story as it's the author/narrator speaking directly to the reader	
 	 	 	
 	 	 	
== Chapter 41 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
everywhere else on this particular time-zone 	everywhere else in this particular time zone 	Typo and remove hyphen 	
the chess piece shaped tower 	the chess-piece-shaped tower 	Hyphens 	
the now empty bag 	the now-empty bag 	Hyphen 	
his lightning bolt ring 	his lightning-bolt ring 	Multiple occurrences 	
the empty class-room 	the empty classroom 	Should be one word 	
"Shhh, It's okay," 	"Shhh, it's okay," 	Lowercase 	
up the stairs heading to the second floor girl's bathroom	up the stairs, heading to the second-floor girls' bathroom	Could also be "the stairs leading to" 	
the chamber / the chamber of secrets 	the Chamber / the Chamber of Secrets 	Multiple occurrences 	
eleven year old 	eleven-year-old 	Multiple occurrences 	
high level charms 	high-level charms 	Hyphen 	
carry a phoenix father 	carry a phoenix feather 	Typo 	
It's eyes darted 	Its eyes darted 	Remove apostrophe 	
Ginny nimbly side-stepped 	Ginny nimbly sidestepped 	Should be one word 	
"Just the one month, Luna." Harry said. 	"Just the one month, Luna," Harry said. 	Change to comma 	
And its former drug dealer 	And it's former drug dealer 	Apostrophe 	
window to the black lake 	window to the Black Lake 	Capitalize 	
Harry's dream-scape 	Harry's dreamscape 	Should be one word 	
as far as they eye could see 	as far as the eye could see 	Typo 	
the start of year now 	the start of the year now 	Missing word 	
another first year girl's bed 	another first-year girl's bed 	Hyphen 	
SHUT UP! Virgo roared 	SHUT UP! Virgo roared 	Italics 	
her lovely, long, blond 	her lovely, long, blonde 	Typo 	
could bare useful fruit 	could bear useful fruit 	Typo 	
her second year Slytherin-Gryffindor potions class 	her second-year Slytherin-Gryffindor potions class 	Hyphen 	
the Parkinson Heiress 	the Parkinson heiress 	Lowercase 	
that at least, hadn't changed 	that, at least, hadn't changed 	Comma 	
minor sleeping draft 	minor sleeping draught 	British spelling? 	
correcting student's efforts 	correcting students' efforts 	Move apostrophe 	
St. Peter's Hospital 	St Peter's Hospital 	Remove period 	
two distinct thought-processes 	two distinct thought processes 	Remove hyphen 	
All over the news papers 	All over the newspapers 	Should be one word 	
over powered little minions 	overpowered little minions 	Should be one word 	
the maître d said 	the maître d' said 	Apostrophe 	
extreme Light sided ideals 	extreme Light-sided ideals 	Hyphen 	
in the favour of the Light 	in favour of the Light 	Remove "the" 	
was panting, by the booth's door 	were panting, by the booth's door 	Typo 	
half way to do the door. 	halfway to the door. 	"halfway" is one word, and remove "do"	
as chief Auror 	as chief auror 	Lowercase 	
bit of word play 	bit of wordplay 	Should be one word 	
his now messy hair 	his now-messy hair 	Hyphen 	
Yes, Sir / Harry Potter, Sir 	Yes, sir / Harry Potter, sir 	Multiple occurrences 	
be wanting here, Sir 	be wanting here, sir 	Lowercase 	
His hair was starting grow 	His hair was starting to grow 	Missing word 	
in a sing song voice 	in a sing-song voice 	Hyphen 	
as much free-reign 	as much free rein 	Typo and remove hyphen 	
"Sorry Professor," Hermione said 	"Sorry, Professor," Hermione said 	Comma? 	
a bit off professor 	a bit off, Professor 	Comma and capitalize 	
Oh, no, professor 	Oh, no, Professor 	Capitalize 	
"I don't understand, professor." 	"I don't understand, Professor." 	Capitalize 	
And just like that the tears stopped 	And just like that, the tears stopped 	Comma? 	
your animagi mind scapes 	your animagi mindscapes 	Should be one word 	
In his time of course, 	In his time, of course, 	Comma? 	
about that nick-name 	about that nickname 	Should be one word 	
The Headmaster clearly had 	The headmaster clearly had 	Lowercase 	
a sixteen year old Dark Lord 	a sixteen-year-old Dark Lord 	Hyphens 	
the now empty fireplace 	the now-empty fireplace 	Hyphen 	
the Gryffindor Table 	the Gryffindor table 	Lowercase 	
a set of stair cases 	a set of staircases 	Should be one word 	
rapidly back-peddling 	rapidly backpeddalling 	Typo and remove hyphen 	
making accusation like that 	making accusations like that 	Should be plural 	
white faced and sweating 	white-faced and sweating 	Hyphen 	
except from during group combat training 	except during group combat training 	Remove "from" 	
And her dream scape opened 	And her dreamscape opened 	Should be one word 	
provide many hand holds 	provide many handholds 	Should be one word 	
they were cold blooded killers 	they were cold-blooded killers 	Hyphen 	
the tell-tale rustle of leaves 	the telltale rustle of leaves 	Should be one word 	
when Bullstrode got me 	when Bulstrode got me 	Typo 	
among first year students 	among first-year students 	Hyphen 	
the bag by her feet 	the bag by his feet 	Typo 	
the mass of black clad students 	the mass of black-clad students 	Hyphen 	
over six-thousand lenses 	over six thousand lenses 	Remove hyphen 	
the tinniest of ripples 	the tiniest of ripples 	Typo 	
in a Merlin damned duel 	in a Merlin-damned duel 	Hyphen 	
any long term effects 	any long-term effects 	Hyphen 	
founder's club 	Founders Club 	For consistency (multiple occurrences)	
the second year muggleborns 	the second-year muggleborns 	Hyphen 	
the first year muggleborns 	the first-year muggleborns 	Hyphen 	
mandrake leaf induced dizziness 	mandrake-leaf-induced dizziness 	Hyphens 	
would dampened down considerably 	would dampen down considerably 	Alternatively, "be dampened" 	
Vicious looking cut marks 	Vicious-looking cut marks 	Hyphen 	
The chalk board had been 	The chalkboard had been 	Should be one word 	
each individual window pane's 	each individual windowpane's 	Should be one word 	
out of the girl's dorms 	out of the girls' dorms 	Move apostrophe 	
the second year's dormitory 	the second years' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
in a half an hour 	in half an hour 	Remove "a" (or "an") 	
The grass land was now 	The grassland was now 	Should be one word 	
the otherwise flat plane 	the otherwise-flat plain 	Hyphen and typo 	
hid another plane 	hid another plain 	Hyphen 	
a small heard of giraffes 	a small herd of giraffes 	Typo 	
tried to out run 	tried to outrun 	Should be one word 	
There was a loud bleet 	There was a loud bleat 	Typo