Editing 6

== Chapter 29 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
two then just 	two than just 	 	
As a responsibly adult, I have 	As a responsible adult, I have 	 	
We'll use liquid memories siphoned off before hand	We'll use liquid memories siphoned off beforehand 	 	
of what we're doing, and blindfolding me 	of what we're doing and blindfolding me 	no comma 	
by Hermione with the ear piece 	by Hermione with the earpiece 	 	
, Daphne will fit me with the ear piece 	, Daphne will fit me with the earpiece 	 	
When step 5 starts, a new paragraph 	 	 	
He'd tried on one of the ear pieces 	He'd tried on one of the earpieces 	 	
Harry brought out the ear pieces 	Harry brought out the earpieces 	 	
one the one side... 	on the one side... 	 	
to avoid a man riding on horse back 	to avoid a man riding on horseback 	Should be one word 	
the white washed stone walls 	the whitewashed stone walls 	Should be one word 	
over at the leading Knight Wagon 	over at the leading knight wagon 	For consistency 	
the department of magical trade 	the Department of Magical Trade 	Capitalize 	
This is Goblin business, human 	This is goblin business, human 	Lowercase 	
None what so ever, merely a profitable contract 	None whatsoever, merely a profitable contract 	Should be one word 	
produced a battle axe from no where 	produced a battle axe from nowhere 	Should be one word 	
producing a two handed sword 	producing a two-handed sword 	Hyphen 	
You, the Boneslicer clan, call us traitors! 	You, the Boneslicer clan, call us traitors? 	Change to question mark, or interrobang 	
YOU POWER GRABBING DESPOTS! 	YOU POWER-GRABBING DESPOTS! 	Hyphen 	
Dark Lord Voldemort, tall, bald, white skinned 	Dark Lord Voldemort, tall, bald, white-skinned 	Hyphen 	
writhing and jerking in mid air 	writhing and jerking in midair 	Should be one word 	
an almost bored wave 	an almost-bored waved 	Hyphen 	
fired a red spell at Older Hermione 	fired a red spell at older Hermione 	Lowercase for consistency 	
the now headless corpse 	the now-headless corpse 	Hyphen 	
even babies still clutched in their mother's arms 	even babies still clutched in their mothers' arms 	Move apostrophe 	
and the always brief howls of anguish 	and the always-brief howls of anguish 	Hyphen 	
on the one side [...] and on the other hand, 	on the one hand [...] and on the other hand, 	Change to be consistent 	
Hermione drew back and blowed her nose 	Hermione drew back and blew her nose 	Typo 	
some potions on the other hand, would be quite bad	some potions, on the other hand, would be quite bad	Comma 	
unless its for one of our projects 	unless it's for one of our projects 	Apostrophe 	
a high level panic attack for some reason 	a high-level panic attack for some reason 	Hyphen 	
great control over her day to day emotions 	great control over her day-to-day emotions 	Two hyphens 	
deep into her now vulnerable mind 	deep into her now-vulnerable mind 	Hyphen 	
the chimaera room." Harry commented. 	the chimaera room," Harry commented. 	Change to comma 	
face another chimaera." Hermione's voice said. 	face another chimaera," Hermione's voice said. 	Change to comma 	
looked like tropical rain forest 	looked like a tropical rain forest 	Missing word 	
spotting a large vine like thing 	spotting a large vine-like thing 	Hyphen 	
the almost total darkness 	the almost-total darkness 	Hyphen 	
or maybe just professor Sinistra's? 	or maybe just Professor Sinistra's? 	Capitalize 	
"Careful now." Harry said 	"Careful now," Harry said 	Change to comma 	
a straight up lie detector test 	a straight-up lie detector test 	Hyphen 	
"Mirrors." Harry said. 	"Mirrors," Harry said. 	Change to comma 	
The four members of the Founder's Club 	The four members of the Founders Club 	Remove apostrophe for consistency 	
Very well behaved group you have 	Very well-behaved group you have 	Hyphen 	
contract parchments." Justin said. 	contract parchments," Justin said. 	Change to comma 	
"Good." Harry said. 	"Good," Harry said. 	Change to comma 	
skinned alive if my house mates 	skinned alive if my housemates 	Should be one word 	
the house of an old dark, pureblood family 	the house of an old Dark pureblood family 	Not sure 	
a more light attitude 	a more Light attitude 	Not sure 	
two charms needed for the Granger's new toy 	two charms needed for the Grangers' new toy 	Move apostrophe 	
it fitted like a glove 	it fit like a glove 	Typo 	
Mrs. Harper 	Mrs Harper 	Two occurrences 	
knelt down slightly to it, "A pleasure." 	knelt down slightly to it. "A pleasure." 	Change to period, or make "a" lowercase 	
Peregrine leaned back slightly, "Straight to price	Peregrine leaned back slightly. "Straight to price 	Change to period, or make "straight" lowercase 	
Straight to price hmm? 	Straight to price, hmm? 	Comma 	
while holding a nimbus 2000 broomstick 	while holding a Nimbus 2000 broomstick 	Capitalize 	
the troll slaying princess 	the troll-slaying princess 	Hyphen 	
incite my future sister in law's dislike 	incite my future sister-in-law's dislike 	Two hyphens 	
Unlike the Harpers, the Bell's wards 	Unlike the Harpers, the Bells' wards 	Move apostrophe 	
Mrs Bell worked part time at Witch Co 	Mrs Bell worked part-time at WitchCo 	Hyphen, and make "WitchCo" one word for consistency (or hyphenate it)	
get some practise in 	get some practice in 	Noun form 	
make every practise hour count 	make every practice hour count 	Noun form 	
two, brand new, miniaturised communication mirrors	two, brand-new, miniaturised communication mirrors 	Hyphen 	
the miniature Granger milled runes 	the miniature Granger-milled runes 	Hyphen 	
distances of up to five-hundred metres 	distances of up to five hundred metres 	Remove hyphen 	
cash strapped teenage girls 	cash-strapped teenage girls 	Hyphen 	
the fidelius trip wire 	the fidelius tripwire 	Should be one word 	
study the layout of the room before hand 	study the layout of the room beforehand 	Should be one word 	
wouldn't that leave us vulnerable 	Wouldn't that leave us vulnerable 	Capitalize 	
along with an authenticated ID. 	along with an authenticated ID." 	Add closing quote 	
answer Statue Snape's questions 	answer statue Snape's questions 	Not sure 	
which it sound like it might 	which it sounds like it might 	Typo 	
even with practise and training before hand 	even with practice and training beforehand 	Noun form of "practice" and "beforehand" is one word 	
The chance of this actually working, aren't great 	The chances of this actually working aren't great 	Make "chance" plural and remove comma 	
some practise and testing 	some practice and testing 	Noun form 	
not only by humans, but also by Goblins 	not only by humans, but also by goblins 	Lowercase 	
Harry was sitting crosslegged on the floor 	Harry was sitting cross-legged on the floor 	Hyphen 	
The Headmaster hadn't yet made a move 	The headmaster hadn't yet made a move 	Lowercase 	
a lot of the Granger's stuff wouldn't react 	a lot of the Grangers' stuff wouldn't react 	Move apostrophe 	
deeper into his occlumency induced trance 	deeper into his occlumency-induced trance 	Hyphen 	
political barb or well veiled insult 	political barb or well-veiled insult 	Hyphen 	
when Harry's red headed spitfire 	when Harry's redheaded spitfire 	Should be one word 	
adopted a good natured look 	adopted a good-natured look 	Hyphen 	
lightning bolt ring 	lightning-bolt ring 	Multiple occurrences 	
the stairs of the Twin's work trunk 	the stairs of the twins' work trunk 	Lowercase and move apostrophe 	
The twin's looked at each other 	The twins looked at each other 	Remove apostrophe 	
grabbed the marauder's map 	grabbed the Marauder's Map 	Capitalize 	
The Twin's bent back over their work bench 	The twins bent back over their workbench 	Lowercase and remove apostrophe, and "workbench" is one word 	
Hermione gazed at the marauder's map 	Hermione gazed at the Marauder's Map 	Capitalize 	
third floor on the left hand side 	third floor on the left-hand side 	Hyphen 	
started moving towards the second floor," 	started moving towards the second floor." 	Change to period 	
half way down their current corridor 	halfway down their current corridor 	Should be one word 	
The Greengrass Heiress jerked backwards 	The Greengrass heiress jerked backwards 	Lowercase 	
Hermione pulsed a pre-arranged message 	Hermione pulsed a prearranged message 	Should be one word 	
The Greengrass Heiress said meekly 	The Greengrass heiress said meekly 	Lowercase 	
He had fate on his side. 	He had Fate on his side. 	Capitalize 	
We should do it somewhere safe. 	We should do it somewhere safe." 	Add closing quote 	
the now colour changed potion 	the now-colour-changed potion 	Two hyphens 	
everything down there, re-arranged itself 	everything down there rearranged itself 	Remove comma and hyphen 	
this was so weird, but…" His mind 	this was so weird, but… His mind 	Remove extraneous quote 	
a curtsying dark-skinned lady 	a curtseying dark-skinned lady 	For consistency 	
== Chapter 30 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
CONTINUITY ERROR 	while also gazing up at the massive stone statue of Severus Snape with her normal eyes
CHAPTER 20 IT SAYS
He peeked into the sixth room to spy a three metre tall bronze statue of Severus Snape	 	
not of the House, under threat 	not of the house, under threat 	 	
this close to stealing House secrets." 	this close to stealing house secrets." 	 	
and the light were squeaking 	and the lights were saying that he was going t	2 mistakes 	
half of the mirror ear piece pair 	half of the mirror earpiece pair 	 	
told to first year students 	told to first-year students 	Hyphen 	
enchantment, illusion, and age old runes 	enchantment, illusion, and age-old runes 	Hyphen 	
deep in the very stone work 	deep in the very stonework 	Should be one word 	
a well placed illegal dark curse 	a well-placed illegal dark curse 	Hyphen 	
He didn't get any did he? 	He didn't get any, did he? 	Comma 	
a straight up frame attempt 	a straight-up frame attempt 	Hyphen 	
with eye-witness testimony alone 	with eyewitness testimony alone 	Should be one word 	
you can catch the person red handed 	you can catch the person red-handed 	Hyphen 	
Malfoy's otherwise cautious eyes 	Malfoy's otherwise-cautious eyes 	Hyphen 	
the Malfoy's more divisive political views 	the Malfoys' more divisive political views 	Move apostrophe 	
an upcoming Dark focused Wizengamot bill 	an upcoming Dark-focused Wizengamot bill 	Hyphen 	
maybe make some well chosen concessions 	maybe make some well-chosen concessions 	Hyphen 	
Plato regarded him with wide-eyes 	Plato regarded him with wide eyes 	Remove hyphen 	
what I expect is plain emerald green robes 	what I expect is plain emerald-green robes 	Hyphen 	
the super powerful boy 	the super-powerful boy 	Hyphen 	
his desk in the Headmaster's office 	his desk in the headmaster's office 	Lowercase 	
before focusing on the Headmaster again 	before focusing on the headmaster again 	Lowercase 	
that badly during practise 	that badly during practice 	Noun form 	
"To fight you-know-who." 	"To fight You-Know-Who." 	Capitalize 	
I…I like to think I would 	I… I like to think I would 	Space 	
over his moon shaped glasses 	over his moon-shaped glasses 	Hyphen 	
the stone faced young metamorph 	the stone-faced young metamorph 	Hyphen 	
letting out a laugh belly laugh 	letting out a loud belly laugh 	Typo? Not sure what it is supposed to be 	
leaving the Headmaster alone 	leaving the headmaster alone 	Lowercase 	
stared at the now closed door 	stared at the now-closed door 	Hyphen 	
the mission preparation sessions that Harry 	the mission preparation sessions which Harry 	Optional 	
pre-written 	prewritten 	Multiple occurrences 	
she'd summoned her eye of Kilrogg 	she'd summoned her Eye of Kilrogg 	Capitalize 	
Daphne nodded, slightly wide eyed 	Daphne nodded, slightly wide-eyed 	Hyphen? 	
John walked into the Headmaster's office 	John walked into the headmaster's office 	Lowercase 	
let the chamber of secrets open 	let the Chamber of Secrets open 	Capitalize 	
stop the chamber incident 	stop the Chamber incident 	Capitalize 	
triumph shoot through the Headmaster's eyes 	triumph shoot through the headmaster's eyes 	Lowercase 	
looked up at the wide eyed crowd 	looked up at the wide-eyed crowd 	Hyphen 	
that long term time travel is illegal 	that long-term time travel is illegal 	Hyphen 	
great snake out on the school.' 	great snake out on the school.'" 	Add closing quote 	
Ginny is hers. Time-travel. 	Ginny is hers. Time travel. 	Remove hyphen 	
neither of us want this conversation 	neither of us wants this conversation 	"Neither" is singular, so add "s" to "want" 	
Of course, I don't 	Of course I don't 	Remove comma 	
John opened the door, steeped through it 	John opened the door, stepped through it 	Typo 	
the only non noble present 	the only non-noble present 	Hyphen 	
a Lord of the Wizengamot 	a lord of the Wizengamot 	Lowercase 	
Granger is in Healer training 	Granger is in healer training 	Lowercase 	
pass for a Slytherin Princess 	pass for a Slytherin princess 	Lowercase 	
half the board members might be light 	half the board members might be Light 	Capitalize 	
one of the light members 	one of the Light members 	Capitalize 	
Britain's ministry enforced oligopoly 	Britain's ministry-enforced oligopoly 	Hyphen 	
the department of magical trade 	the Department of Magical Trade 	Capitalize 	
reason to vote anti-dumbledore 	reason to vote anti-Dumbledore 	Capitalize 	
the ministry's long term effort 	the ministry's long-term effort 	Hyphen 	
information on magic spells and practises 	information on magic spells and practices 	Noun form 	
all kinds of space expanded items 	all kinds of space-expanded items 	Hyphen 	
The Lord's oldest son 	The lord's oldest son 	Lowercase 	
I thought you had Healer lessons? 	I thought you had healer lessons? 	Lowercase 	
same size as the Greengrass heiress.' 	same size as the Greengrass heiress'. 	Fix apostrophe 	
this was no mere practise duel 	this was no mere practice duel 	Noun form 	
months of practise making every motion 	months of practice making every motion 	Noun form 	
dug into the soft grass making indents 	dug into the soft grass, making indents 	Comma 	
jinxes collided in mid air 	jinxes collided in midair 	Should be one word 	
between hers and Greengrass' wands 	between her and Greengrass' wands 	Typo 	
the silver threat strengthened 	the silver thread strengthened 	Typo 	
it turned out to be you-know-who 	it turned out to be You-Know-Who 	Capitalize 	
alongside Greengrass' identical foci 	alongside Greengrass' identical focus 	Should be singular 	
Saturday before the Duelling tournament 	Saturday before the duelling tournament 	Lowercase 	
made fall backs, back up plans 	made fallbacks, backup plans 	"fallbacks" and "backup" should both be one word	
a round, human sized hole 	a round, human-sized hole 	Hyphen 	
that normally hosted Fawkes, was still empty	that normally hosted Fawkes was still empty 	Remove comma 	
glanced at the marauder's map 	glanced at the Marauder's Map 	Capitalize 	
all chosen by Harry before hand 	all chosen by Harry beforehand 	Should be one word 	
There were two types of obliviate 	There were two types of obliviation 	Not sure 	
those without intermediate level occlumency 	those without intermediate-level occlumency 	Hyphen 	
leading Harry over to the now open door 	leading Harry over to the now-open door 	Hyphen 	
back into the still open pipe 	back into the still-open pipe 	Hyphen 	
step by step 	step-by-step 	Multiple occurences 	
until Daphne says the word's 	until Daphne says the words 	Remove apostrophe 	
behind his moon shaped glasses 	behind his moon-shaped glasses 	Hyphen 	
put his tea cup down 	put his teacup down 	Should be one word 	
mirror room with her eye of Kilrogg 	mirror room with her Eye of Kilrogg 	Capitalize 	
magics negated the Veritaserum 	magics negated the veritaserum 	Lowercase 	
Dumbledore raised the elder wand 	Dumbledore raised the Elder Wand 	Capitalize 	
several dozen cross bow bolts 	several dozen crossbow bolts 	Should be one word 	
turning him into a human pin cushion 	turning him into a human pincushion 	Should be one word 	
sending several tones of stone 	sending several tonnes of stone 	Typo 	
wielding an eight foot long Goedendag 	wielding an eight-foot-long Goedendag 	Hyphens 	
catching the Goedendag in mid-air 	catching the Goedendag in midair 	Should be one word 	
emit a little chocked sob 	emit a little choked sob 	Typo 	
think about what ever it might be 	think about whatever it might be 	Should be one word 	
bathed in almost total darkness 	bathed in almost-total darkness 	Hyphen 	
a three kiloflamel ward system 	a three-kiloflamel ward system 	Hyphen 	
This definitely wasn't practise 	This definitely wasn't practice 	Noun form 	
the dust pilled up in the corners 	the dust piled up in the corners 	Typo 	
turn you into a polka dotted frog 	turn you into a polka-dotted frog 	Hyphen 	
dashed though the still open hole 	dashed through the still-open hole 	Hyphen and typo 	
The third floor defences have failed 	The third-floor defences have failed 	Hyphen 	
prominently featured Older Hermione 	prominently featured older Hermione 	Lowercase? 	
away from preying little fingers 	away from prying little fingers 	Typo 	
where it lay on by the door 	where it lay by the door 	Remove "on" 	
goggled at his former Headmaster 	goggled at his former headmaster 	Lowercase 	
department of magical law enforcement 	Department of Magical Law Enforcement 	Capitalize 	
the girl's second floor bathroom 	the girls' second-floor bathroom 	Move apostrophe and add hyphen 	
where upon they quickly formed themselves 	whereupon they quickly formed themselves 	Should be one word 	
It wasn't as thought they didn't have 	It wasn't as though they didn't have 	Typo 	
every minute that past 	every minute that passed 	Typo 	
and whispered, "$Open$." 	and whispered, "§Open§." 	 	
== Chapter 31 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
POTENTIAL PLOTHOLE 	Open Discord link Open Discord link 	 	
of Britain, an Ancient House at least 	of Britain, an Ancient house at least 	 	
tugging at their mother's sleeves, 	tugging at their **mothers'** sleeves, 	 	
so long as it's controlled I dear say 	so long as it's controlled I dare say 	 	
a resurrected dark lord 	a resurrected Dark Lord 	Not sure 	
Clearly, Nicholas's devilish mirror 	Clearly, Nicolas's devilish mirror 	Typo 	
Tom's surely expression momentarily shifted 	Tom's surly expression momentarily shifted 	Typo 	
Tom's face became surely again 	Tom's face became surly again 	Typo 	
I'd say, 'you-know-who,' 	I'd say, 'You-Know-Who,' 	Not sure 	
there might be a third — his eyes widened — and that 	there might be a third—his eyes widened—and that 	Closed em-dashes for asides 	
certainly not the mirror of Erised 	certainly not the Mirror of Erised 	Capitalize 	
what ever it was they did in their mirrors 	whatever it was they did in their mirrors 	Should be one word 	
The red stone holding Daphne 	The red-stone-holding Daphne 	Hyphens 	
ice throne Daphne 	ice-throne Daphne 	Multiple occurrences 	
red stone Daphne 	red-stone Daphne 	Multiple occurrences 	
bit of glass under foot 	bit of glass underfoot 	Should be one word 	
the now traditional floating rock 	the now-traditional floating rock 	Hyphen 	
remains into an ever growing pile 	remains into an ever-growing pile 	Hyphen 	
just one mirror — The Mirror of Erised 	just one mirror — the Mirror of Erised 	Not sure 	
he held a blood red stone 	he held a blood-red stone 	Hyphen 	
ruffled Reflection-Daphne's hair 	ruffled reflection Daphne's hair 	Lowercase and remove hyphen 	
Reflection-Daphne looked embarrassed 	Reflection Daphne looked embarrassed 	Remove hyphen 	
Sofa bound Harry lightly kissed 	Sofa-bound Harry lightly kissed 	Hyphen 	
would cause the Headmaster 	would cause the headmaster 	Lowercase 	
Lockdown is the second highest level 	Lockdown is the second-highest level 	Hyphen 	
a group of first year students 	a group of first-year students 	Hyphen 	
it is reassuring that the Headmaster 	it is reassuring that the headmaster 	Lowercase 	
a related twenty-four hour block 	a related twenty-four-hour block 	Hyphen 	
watching the Slytherin duelling practises 	watching the Slytherin duelling practices 	Noun form 	
the lengths a young boy would go through 	the lengths a young boy would go to 	Not sure 	
a particularly well coordinated spell chain 	a particularly well-coordinated spell chain 	Hyphen 	
A long distance smoke illusion 	A long-distance smoke illusion 	Hyphen 	
and finished up with a low powered 	and finished up with a low-powered 	Hyphen 	
before nodded to himself 	before nodding to himself 	Typo 	
crosslegged in front of the mirror 	cross-legged in front of the mirror 	Hyphen 	
in front of which, was a mountain 	in front of which was a mountain 	Remove comma 	
the phobia induced panic attack 	the phobia-induced panic attack 	Hyphen 	
This was a less than ideal solution 	This was a less-than-ideal solution 	Hyphens 	
the set up for the second step 	the setup for the second step 	Noun form is one word 	
a split consciousness controlled mind-scape 	a split-consciousness-controlled mindscape 	Add two hyphens and remove one 	
he wasn't ether dealing with Lord Slytherin 	he wasn't either dealing with Lord Slytherin 	Typo 	
he couldn't hand wave away 	he couldn't handwave away 	Should be one word 	
In that practise time 	In that practice time 	Noun form 	
a mitosis intended microbe 	a mitosis-intended microbe 	Hyphen 	
John fingered the rune dense duelling robe 	John fingered the rune-dense duelling robe 	Hyphen 	
over his moon shaped glasses 	over his moon-shaped glasses 	Hyphen 	
brain dead obvious even to him 	brain-dead obvious even to him 	Hyphen 	
sown into the robe 	sewn into the robe 	Typo 	
I just need you to counter sign here 	I just need you to countersign here 	Should be one word 	
the oppressive lock-down magics 	the oppressive lockdown magics 	Should be one word 	
duelling teams of all four hoses 	duelling teams of all four houses 	Typo 	
dressed in formidable looking duelling robes 	dressed in formidable-looking duelling robes 	Hyphen 	
well fitting that they might be 	well-fitting that they might be 	Hyphen? 	
Its all part of cunning Slytherin plan 	It's all part of a cunning Slytherin plan 	Apostrophe and missing word 	
from the first time-line 	from the first timeline 	Should be one word 	
Welcome, My Lords and Ladies 	Welcome, my Lords and Ladies 	Lowercase 	
no transfiguration, weapons other than a wand, and no curses	no transfiguration, no weapons other than a wand, and no curses	All three listed things should start with a "no"	
Oh, Good morning, Headmaster 	Oh, good morning, Headmaster 	Lowercase 	
members of their opposing team has been defeated 	members of their opposing team have been defeated 	Typo 	
down into a shallow curtsy 	down into a shallow curtsey 	For consistency 	
look of good natured knowing 	look of good-natured knowing 	Hyphen 	
here is the Slytherin Team 	here is the Slytherin team 	Lowercase 	
pointing to last figure 	pointing to the last figure 	Missing word 	
It kind-of hurt 	It kind of hurt 	Remove hyphen 	
The arena was a wide open circle 	The arena was a wide-open circle 	Hyphen 	
the defeater of you-know-who 	the defeater of You-Know-Who 	Capitalize 	
his first ever duelling match 	his first-ever duelling match 	Hyphen 	
Bones Heiress 	Bones heiress 	Multiple occurrences 	
only throwing first year spells 	only throwing first-year spells 	Hyphen 	
A desperate strategy that. 	A desperate strategy, that. 	Comma 	
That had to be second year level 	That had to be second-year level 	Hyphen 	
sometimes carried the full sized version 	sometimes carried the full-sized version 	Hyphen 	
the second year Ravenclaw 	the second-year Ravenclaw 	Hyphen 	
across the ground like a rag-doll 	across the ground like a ragdoll 	Should be one word 	
gave him a self satisfied smirk 	gave him a self-satisfied smirk 	Hyphen 	
The second year Hufflepuff regarded him 	The second-year Hufflepuff regarded him 	Hyphen 	
the second-year-Hufflepuff's best 	the second-year Hufflepuff's best 	Remove hyphen 	
his shocked beyond belief opponent 	his shocked-beyond-belief opponent 	Hyphens 	
I…I didn't just see that 	I… I didn't just see that 	Space 	
Those were third year spells 	Those were third-year spells 	Hyphen 	
impressive ones, as well." Seamus added. 	impressive ones, as well," Seamus added. 	Change to comma 	
bottom in year." Neville said quietly 	bottom in year," Neville said quietly 	Change to comma 	
long strawberry blonde hair 	long strawberry-blonde hair 	Hyphen 	
Minor gale force winds 	Minor gale-force winds 	Hyphen 	
Mister Potter will go onto his 	Mister Potter will go on to his 	Should be two words 	
his fourth year opponent 	his fourth-year opponent 	Multiple occurrences 	
Those were third year charms 	Those were third-year charms 	Hyphen 	
shouldn't know third year charms 	shouldn't know third-year charms 	Hyphen 	
an over-powered banishing charm 	an overpowered banishing charm 	Should be one word 	
John's follow up stunner sailed 	John's follow-up stunner sailed 	Hyphen 	
stunner sailed right on-through 	stunner sailed right on through 	Remove hyphen 	
the goblet of fire 	the Goblet of Fire 	Capitalize 	
"I…I…" The commentator seemed lost 	"I… I…" The commentator seemed lost 	Space 	
his fifth year challenger 	his fifth-year challenger 	Hyphen 	
he bellowed into the silence , pumping a fist 	he bellowed into the silence, pumping a fist 	Remove space before comma 	
At the still empty healing station 	At the still-empty healing station 	Hyphen 	
Can Harry Potter match his brother's performance! 	Can Harry Potter match his brother's performance? 	Change to question mark, or interrobang 	
a first year banishing spell 	a first-year banishing spell 	Hyphen 	
a fourth year shield 	a fourth-year shield 	Hyphen 	
your second year seed 	your second-year seed 	Multiple occurrences 	
found it's fist connecting 	found its fist connecting 	Remove apostrophe 	
splash into the fourth year puff 	splash into the fourth-year Puff 	hyphen and capitalize 	
up onto the now soaking boy 	up onto the now-soaking boy 	Hyphen 	
Stop being a worry wart 	Stop being a worrywart 	Should be one word 	
still couldn't go toe to toe 	still couldn't go toe-to-toe 	Two hyphens 	
fifth year opponent 	fifth-year opponent 	Hyphen 	
The two golem's crashed together 	The two golems crashed together 	Remove apostrophe 	
sprinted towards his wide eyed opponent 	sprinted towards his wide-eyed opponent 	Hyphen 	
The fifth year Ravenclaw 	The fifth-year Ravenclaw 	Hyphen 	
defeating their entire Duelling teams 	defeating their entire duelling teams 	Lowercase 	
continued to casually side step 	continued to casually sidestep 	Should be one word 	
flail uselessly in mid air 	flail uselessly in midair 	Should be one word 	
and in-between dodging and shielding 	and in between dodging and shielding 	Remove hyphen 	
charged at the fifth year Ravenclaw 	charged at the fifth-year Hufflepuff 	Hyphen and typo 	
paying no attention to the nearby Slytherin's 	paying no attention to the nearby Slytherins 	Remove apostrophe 	
a full on ear to ear affair 	a full-on ear-to-ear affair 	Three hyphens 	
a seven foot tall knight 	a seven-foot-tall knight 	Two hyphens 	
his casting line up 	his casting lineup 	Should be one word 	
in the Potter library 	in the Potter Library 	Capitalize 	
the much larger sixth year Hufflepuff 	the much larger sixth-year Hufflepuff 	Hyphen 	
using sixth year spells 	using sixth-year spells 	Hyphen 	
magic hating muggle relatives 	magic-hating muggle relatives 	Hyphen 	
without their team mates 	without their teammates 	Should be one word 	
He focused onto his opponent 	He focused on his opponent 	Typo 	
The seventh year Ravenclaw 	The seventh-year Ravenclaw 	Multiple occurrences 	
"Homenum Revelio!" "Ventus divinum!" 	"Homenum Revelio! Ventus divinum!" 	Get rid of quotes in the middle 	
his opponents location 	his opponent's location 	Apostrophe 	
to hinder the claw's movements 	to hinder the Claw's movements 	Capitalize 	
the claw gave it up 	the Claw gave it up 	Capitalize 	
a still bright, but slowly dimming misty knight 	a still-bright, but slowly dimming misty knight 	Hyphen 	
a medium sized golem 	a medium-sized golem 	Hyphen 	
Tonks… Tonks…Harry's eyes widened 	Tonks… Tonks… Harry's eyes widened 	Space 	
Whoa. High level illusions. 	Whoa. High-level illusions. 	Hyphen 	
Now, This was just like 	Now, this was just like 	Lowercase 	
The announcer voice cut through his fun 	The announcer's voice cut through his fun 	Typo 	
listened with baited breath 	listened with bated breath 	Typo 	
when the fall on their bum 	when they fall on their bum 	Typo 	
towards him like an inferi 	towards him like an inferius 	Should be singular 	
not being paying attention 	not been paying attention 	Typo 	
a certain purple turban wearing individual 	a certain purple-turban-wearing individual 	Hyphens 	
a bunch of notice me nots 	a bunch of notice-me-nots 	Hyphens 	
his seventh year opponent 	his seventh-year opponent 	Hyphen 	
The twenty minute break 	The twenty-minute break 	Hyphen 	
John Potter barley dodged another 	John Potter barely dodged another 	Typo 	
no doubt who was playing with who 	no doubt who was playing with whom 	Typo 	
That totally out of control panic 	That totally out-of-control panic 	Hyphens 	
his otherwise full on defensive fight 	his otherwise full-on defensive fight 	Hyphen 	
A pink light shot towards john 	A pink light shot towards John 	Capitalize 	
"Whats going on!" Tracey shouted 	"What's going on!" Tracey shouted 	Apostrophe 	
Daphne made her way through the them 	Daphne made her way through them 	Remove "the" 	
chief warlock of the wizengamot 	chief warlock of the Wizengamot 	Capitalize 	
an on duty member 	an on-duty member 	Hyphen 	
the department of magical law enforcement 	the Department of Magical Law Enforcement 	Capitalize 	
she called to the Bones Regent 	she called to the Bones regent 	Lowercase 	
a tense stand off 	a tense standoff 	Should be one word 	
a space where his out of control intent 	a space where his out-of-control intent 	Hyphens 	
In any-case, I invite you to join me 	In any case, I invite you to join me 	Remove hyphen 	
the wood golem charged at the fifth year Ravenclaw wizard 	the wood golem charged at the fifth year Hufflepuff wizard 	 	
== Chapter 32 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
with expert witnesses, all oh whom were Light. 	with expert witnesses, all of whom were Light. 	 	
Thus we intent to show how 	Thus we intend to show how 	 	
Given the clear and cut nature 	Given the clear-cut nature 	 	
Is there anyway this wand 	Is there any way this wand 	 	
department of mysteries 	Department of Mysteries 	check for other instances 	
miss-trial 	mistrial 	 	
various Light lords were giving Dumbledore funny looks. 	various lords of the Light were giving Dumbledore funny looks. 	 	
veil 	Veil 	Many occurrences 	
a three star verdict 	a three-star verdict 	Hyphen 	
opened to the Headmaster's presence 	opened to the headmaster's presence 	Lowercase 	
down to the first-year boy's dormitory 	down to the first-year boys' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
unseen switching spell on a candle stick 	unseen switching spell on a candlestick 	Should be one word 	
Slytherin first-year girl's dormitory 	Slytherin first-year girls' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
in a swirl of combat ready determination 	in a swirl of combat-ready determination 	Hyphen 	
complete with comfy looking chairs 	complete with comfy-looking chairs 	Hyphen 	
silver fixtures, and emerald green upholstery 	silver fixtures, and emerald-green upholstery 	Hyphen 	
slipped back into stony faced determination 	slipped back into stony-faced determination 	Hyphen 	
one of the clothes filled leather bags 	one of the clothes-filled leather bags 	Hyphen 	
Yes, Daphne, Dear 	Yes, Daphne, dear 	Lowercase 	
Daphne's head become visible again 	Daphne's head became visible again 	Typo 	
to be Harry Potter's defence council 	to be Harry Potter's defence counsel 	Typo 	
shelf of ornate looking envelopes 	shelf of ornate-looking envelopes 	Hyphen 	
It wasn't until some half-way through the row 	It wasn't until some halfway through the row 	Should be one word 	
Lord Ogden's daughter in law 	Lord Ogden's daughter-in-law 	Hyphens 	
the judges may well balk 	the judges may well baulk 	British spelling 	
my daughter's company as a fifteen year old 	my daughter's company as a fifteen-year-old 	Hyphens 	
sit in one of the middle arm chairs 	sit in one of the middle armchairs 	Should be one word 	
Must have been planted before hand 	Must have been planted beforehand 	Should be one word 	
confined in a lower grade version 	confined in a lower-grade version 	Hyphen 	
There weren't any soul sucking demons 	There weren't any soul-sucking demons 	Hyphen 	
Instead, he practising wandless conjuration 	Instead, he practised wandless conjuration 	Typo 	
He played with it in-between trembling fingers 	He played with it in between trembling fingers 	Remove hyphen 	
a purple booted foot carelessly crushed 	a purple-booted foot carelessly crushed 	Hyphen 	
Harry summoned the kind of will power 	Harry summoned the kind of willpower 	Should be one word 	
Dumbledore conjured himself an arm chair 	Dumbledore conjured himself an armchair 	Should be one word 	
appointed me to be your defence council 	appointed me to be your defence counsel 	Typo 	
but the legends says it links 	but the legends say it links 	Typo 	
just before a red-headed witch collided 	just before a redheaded witch collided 	Should be one word 	
his otherwise tired mind 	his otherwise-tired mind 	Hyphen 	
but was there anyway this could backfire 	but was there any way this could backfire 	Should be two words 	
solid iron and rune covered door 	solid iron and rune-covered door 	Hyphen 	
eleven year old 	eleven-year-old 	Multiple occurrences 	
Sirius ignored his new found godson whose dry speech 	Sirius ignored his newfound godson, whose dry speech 	"newfound" is one word, and add comma 	
Mrs. 	Mrs 	Remove period (many occurrences) 	
when a steely eyed Xenophilius Lovegood 	when a steely-eyed Xenophilius Lovegood 	Hyphen 	
Mrs Ogden set her tea-cup down 	Mrs Ogden set her teacup down 	Should be one word 	
court room 	courtroom 	Should be one word (many occurrences) 	
few trials had the boy who lived 	few trials had the boy-who-lived 	Two hyphens 	
Impossible he'd thought 	Impossible, he'd thought 	Comma 	
came to the same blood chilling conclusion 	came to the same blood-chilling conclusion 	Hyphen 	
the chamber of secrets 	the Chamber of Secrets 	Capitalize 	
what his other selves where up to 	what his other selves were up to 	Typo 	
the culmination of over a month of practise 	the culmination of over a month of practice 	Noun form 	
Instantly, magical chains leaped up 	Instantly, magical chains leapt up 	Not sure 	
Directly ahead of him sat three woman 	Directly ahead of him sat three women 	Plural 	
a small canon blast came out of it 	a small cannon blast came out of it 	Typo 	
The Ancient and Noble House of Potter versus The Ministry of Magic	the Ancient and Noble House of Potter versus the Ministry of Magic	Lowercase? Not sure 	
I intent to show that Mister Potter 	I intend to show that Mister Potter 	Typo 	
placed in long term mental care 	placed in long-term mental care 	Hyphen 	
But why! The Gray shouldn't want 	But why? The Gray shouldn't want 	Change to question mark, or interrobang	
He needed to think of someway around that 	He needed to think of some way around that 	Should be two words 	
unknown talent of a snitch seeking prodigy 	unknown talent of a snitch-seeking prodigy 	Hyphen 	
John had worn during tournament 	John had worn during the tournament 	Missing word 	
extremely nervous looking young man 	extremely nervous-looking young man 	Hyphen 	
nodded towards two on duty security wizards 	nodded towards two on-duty security wizards 	Hyphen 	
I dare-say I could if I tried 	I daresay I could if I tried 	Should be one word 	
I suddenly felt a large build up of magic 	I suddenly felt a large build-up of magic 	Hyphen 	
after the magical build up had died down 	after the magical build-up had died down 	Hyphen 	
if someone had experienced magical meltdown 	if someone had experienced a magical meltdown 	Missing word 	
pulling him down into the memory." 	pulling him down into the memory. 	Remove extraneous quote 	
after saying good bye to the other girls 	after saying goodbye to the other girls 	Should be one word 	
Five minutes later, he exited the pensive 	Five minutes later, he exited the pensieve 	Typo 	
A Merlin damned chimaera 	A Merlin-damned chimaera 	Hyphen 	
The book appears to be in near mint condition 	The book appears to be in near-mint condition 	Hyphen 	
and contains the publishing number is 	and the publishing number is 	Remove "contains" 	
the shortest time period, measured in days for a student 	the shortest time period, measured in days, for a student 	Comma 	
They were duelling robes, not wear all the time robes 	They were duelling robes, not wear-all-the-time robes 	Three hyphens 	
the back contains a three part runic cluster 	the back contains a three-part runic cluster 	Hyphen 	
happy to leave you going home in a match box 	happy to leave you going home in a matchbox 	Should be one word 	
Lord Slytherin had out manoeuvred him 	Lord Slytherin had outmanoeuvred him 	Should be one word 	
after several hour of sitting 	after several hours of sitting 	Make plural 	
Harry of course, didn't have that luxury 	Harry, of course, didn't have that luxury 	Comma 	
Regent Bones shot a small canon blast 	Regent Bones shot a small cannon blast 	Typo 	
down to the Hall of Prophecies 	down to the hall of prophecies 	For consistency 	
his leader and old Headmaster 	his leader and old headmaster 	Lowercase 	
You've got a lot work to catch up on 	You've got a lot of work to catch up on 	Missing word 	
== Chapter 33 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
Barring the weight of his fate alone 	Bearing the weight of his fate alone 	 	
"How is the he not dead?" 	"How is he not dead?" 	 	
and spoke into the ear piece. 	and spoke into the earpiece. 	 	
of The Founders Club 	of the Founders Club 	 	
a most un-lady like fashion 	a most unladylike fashion 	Should be one word 	
during their seven week evacuation 	during their seven-week evacuation 	Hyphen 	
"But you did solve it." 	"But you did solve it?" 	Change to question mark 	
another, more buoyant looking, drowning man 	another, more buoyant-looking, drowning man 	Hyphen 	
"Oh! let me tell you…" 	"Oh! Let me tell you…" 	Capitalize 	
only just starting fourth year spells 	only just starting fourth-year spells 	Hyphen 	
I think, we'll need to wait 	I think we'll need to wait 	Remove comma 	
"The boy who lived, of course." 	"The boy-who-lived, of course." 	Two hyphens 	
a three story monstrosity of pure granite 	a three-story monstrosity of pure granite 	Hyphen 	
Even He-whom-it-was-unwise-to-name 	Even he-whom-it-was-unwise-to-name 	Lowercase? 	
the now famous green and black mask 	the now-famous green and black mask 	Hyphen 	
the top half of it's tall bronze frame 	the top half of its tall bronze frame 	Remove apostrophe 	
the remains of her forth or fifth mirror 	the remains of her fourth or fifth mirror 	Typo 	
I'd go through the veil 	I'd go through the Veil 	Capitalize 	
While Daphne lays at your feet 	While Daphne lies at your feet 	Typo 	
swearing life long fealty 	swearing lifelong fealty 	Should be one word 	
slightly startled girls off in mid flow 	slightly startled girls off in mid-flow 	Hyphen 	
with Tom Riddle developed occlumency 	with Tom-Riddle-developed occlumency 	Hyphens 	
Instead of the Headmaster, they'd walked into 	Instead of the headmaster, they'd walked into 	Lowercase 	
to find an un-petrified 	to find an unpetrified 	Should be one word 	
extremely short tempered Professor Snape 	extremely short-tempered Professor Snape 	Hyphen 	
glaring at Harry's yearmates 	glaring at Harry's year mates 	For consistency 	
Harry had hid under the Potter invisibility cloak 	Harry had hidden under the Potter invisibility cloak 	Not sure 	
the department of mysteries 	the Department of Mysteries 	Capitalize 	
the rapidly deteriorating dark lord 	the rapidly deteriorating Dark Lord 	Capitalize 	
carefully slid his make-shift spatula under the mat 	carefully slid his makeshift spatula under the mat 	Should be one word 	
students at the near-end of the Slytherin table 	students at the near end of the Slytherin table 	Remove hyphen 	
if you do see her will you?" 	if you do see her?" 	The sentence currently has the structure "Could you do that will you?". Either remove "will you", or "could you" at the beginning of the sentence	
their upper year opponents 	their upper-year opponents 	Hyphen 	
The entire castle had that end of year feel 	The entire castle had that end-of-year feel 	Hyphens 	
"I'm sure she would." Harry said 	"I'm sure she would," Harry said 	Change to comma 	
leave even the tinniest hint of drollness 	leave even the tiniest hint of drollness 	Typo 	
hidden in the fidelius charmed spot 	hidden in the fidelius-charmed spot 	Hyphen 	
spot in the Hogwarts Library 	spot in the Hogwarts library 	Lowercase 	
a small vial of muddy looking liquid 	a small vial of muddy-looking liquid 	Hyphen 	
"Good luck." Daphne added. 	"Good luck," Daphne added. 	Change to comma 	
Ron, Neville, and Seamus on the other hand, were in awe 	Ron, Neville, and Seamus, on the other hand, were in awe 	Comma 	
Good Morning, John. Please mind the floor 	Good morning, John. Please mind the floor 	Lowercase 	
He smiled twinkly eyed at him 	He smiled twinkly-eyed at him 	Hyphen 	
but time, unfortunately does not allow me any alternative 	but time, unfortunately, does not allow me any alternative 	Or remove first comma 	
Had quirrell attempted to go after it 	Had Quirrell attempted to go after it 	Capitalize 	
Yes, Sir. I won't let you down 	Yes, sir. I won't let you down 	Lowercase 	
Please by careful, John! 	Please be careful, John! 	Typo 	
called the Headmaster from behind him 	called the headmaster from behind him 	Lowercase 	
rune enabled magical earpiece 	rune-enabled magical earpiece 	Hyphen 	
watched on the marauder's map 	watched on the Marauder's Map 	Capitalize 	
in response to another student carried message 	in response to another student-carried message 	Hyphen 	
walked down the Hogwarts main stair case 	walked down the Hogwarts main staircase 	Should be one word 	
Hermione whispered into her ear peace 	Hermione whispered into her earpiece 	Typo 	
cloak in the muggle-studies defence room 	cloak in the muggle studies defence room 	Remove hyphen for consistency 	
he would have loved—AGHHHH!" 	"he would have loved—AGHHHH!" 	Add opening quote 	
Something had grabbed onto Ron's leg 	Something had grabbed on to Ron's leg 	Should be two words 	
"Its dark in here," 	"It's dark in here," 	Apostrophe 	
Stars shone over head. 	Stars shone overhead. 	Should be one word 	
Well there's obviously no troll here so let's find out 	Well, there's obviously no troll here, so let's find out 	Two commas 	
A few minute later they found the star 	A few minutes later they found the star 	Make plural 	
Ron picked up the controller looking extremely uncertain 	Ron picked up the controller, looking extremely uncertain 	Comma 	
single Light halfblood 	single Light half-blood 	Hyphen 	
"It does! …sort of." 	"It does! …Sort of." 	Capitalize 	
and then another, before too long, 	and then another. Before too long, 	Change to period 	
they hadn't been given the secret had they? 	they hadn't been given the secret, had they? 	Comma 	
Ring only communication from here on 	Ring-only communication from here on 	Hyphen 	
Then, the sword wielding John looked at him 	Then, the sword-wielding John looked at him 	Hyphen 	
The stone was non-summonable — probably non levitatable too 	The stone was non-summonable — probably non-levitatable too 	Hyphen 	
you had a ICW meeting 	you had an ICW meeting 	Typo 	
what are we gong to do about my brother 	what are we going to do about my brother 	Typo 	
still clutched in a white knuckled grip 	still clutched in a white-knuckled grip 	Hyphen 	
gabbed the stone with one hand 	grabbed the stone with one hand 	Typo 	
Dumbledore relaxed in his high back chair 	Dumbledore relaxed in his high-back chair 	Hyphen 	
Harry and John's dot had reappeared 	Harry and John's dots had reappeared 	Should be plural 	
saw Susan Bone's head 	saw Susan Bones' head 	Move apostrophe 	
Harry felt his lightning bolt ring 	Harry felt his lightning-bolt ring 	Hyphen 	
the blood red stone 	the blood-red stone 	Hyphen 	
another dot appeared in the Headmaster's office 	another dot appeared in the headmaster's office 	Lowercase 	
Dumbledore had just re-entered the castle 	Dumbledore had just reentered the castle 	Should be one word 	
Nicholas 	Nicolas 	Multiple occurrences 	
He hadn't just heard that had he? 	He hadn't just heard that, had he? 	Comma 	
hand me that stone." Voldemort said 	hand me that stone," Voldemort said 	Change to comma 	
invert itself from out of the metal work 	invert itself from out of the metalwork 	Should be one word 	
catch up to my peers after I leaned 	catch up to my peers after I learned 	Typo 	
You know that. You know, everything. 	You know that. You know everything. 	Remove comma 	
looking between the two of them, wide eyed and fearful 	looking between the two of them, wide-eyed and fearful 	Hyphen? 	
Indeed and had it not been 	Indeed, and had it not been 	Comma 	
started pulsing magic into his lightning bolt ring 	started pulsing magic into his lightning-bolt ring 	Hyphen 	
Daphne started at her without seeming to see 	Daphne stared at her without seeming to see 	Typo 	
crept along the sun baked grounds 	crept along the sun-baked grounds 	Hyphen 	
I've been using the parseltongue only passageways 	I've been using the parseltongue-only passageways 	Hyphen 	
But It wasn't so much what you did leave behind 	But it wasn't so much what you did leave behind 	Lowercase 	
With the castle on lockdown we need to go 	With the castle on lockdown, we need to go 	Comma 	
Of course, the chamber of secrets 	Of course, the Chamber of Secrets. 	Capitalize and add period 	
chamber/chamber of secrets 	Chamber/Chamber of Secrets 	Multiple occurrences 	
Seems pretty far fetched 	Seems pretty far-fetched 	Hyphen 	
that's the point isn't it? 	that's the point, isn't it? 	Comma 	
they exited the pipe and into a space 	they exited the pipe into a space 	Remove "and"? 	
They can be in range of a non secret keeper 	They can be in range of a non-secret keeper 	Hyphen 	
Both you and your brother are vastly over powered 	Both you and your brother are vastly overpowered 	Should be one word 	
rack his brain for someway out of this 	rack his brain for some way out of this 	Should be two words 	
a bunch of pathetic fence sitters 	a bunch of pathetic fence-sitters 	Hyphen 	
another two Horcruxes 	another two horcruxes 	Lowercase 	
imbued with dark lord soul 	imbued with Dark Lord soul 	Capitalize? 	
the dinning room of the ancient alchemist 	the dining room of the ancient alchemist 	Typo 	
Potter was the boy who lived 	Potter was the boy-who-lived 	Hyphens 	
He who must not be named was alive 	He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named was alive 	Hyphens and capitalize 	
every thing about the boy seemed larger than life 	everything about the boy seemed larger than life 	Should be one word 	
using one them as a catalysts 	using one them as a catalyst 	Should be singular 	
against Harry's mile thick occlumency shields 	against Harry's mile-thick occlumency shields 	Hyphen 	
black flames of three headed serpents 	black flames of three-headed serpents 	Hyphen 	
the later, trying her hardest 	the latter trying her hardest 	Typo and remove comma 	
In the first year girl's dormitory 	In the first-year girls' dormitory 	Hyphen and apostrophe 	
crosslegged or sitting back on their knees 	cross-legged or sitting back on their knees 	Hyphen 	
Your hero is in fact, Harry. 	Your hero is, in fact, Harry. 	Comma 	
Do you parents know? 	Do your parents know? 	Typo 	
opened he box 	opened the box 	Typo 	
This so called 'absolute protection' 	This so-called 'absolute protection' 	Hyphen 	
why give him back Voldemort's Horcruxes? 	why give him back Voldemort's horcruxes? 	Lowercase 	
he certainly couldn't keep them here any more 	he certainly couldn't keep them here anymore 	Should be one word 	
his latest lock-down of the school 	his latest lockdown of the school 	Should be one word 	
making his way over to the Muggle side 	making his way over to the muggle side 	Lowercase 	
St Mungo's long term mind healing ward 	St Mungo's long-term mind-healing ward 	Hyphens 	
his normally warm faced Lily 	his normally warm-faced Lily 	Hyphen 	
the department of prophecies 	the Department of Mysteries 	Not sure 	
"Dear, Merlin." 	"Dear Merlin." 	Remove comma? 	
looked down at a one year younger Harry Potter 	looked down at a one-year-younger Harry Potter 	Hyphens 	
'Business…? What does a little freak like you have that could interest us?'	"Business…? What does a little freak like you have that could interest us?"	Change to double quotes 	
"Fifteen-thousand, Uncle." 	"Fifteen thousand, Uncle." 	Remove hyphen 	
And another fifteen-thousand 	And another fifteen thousand 	Remove hyphen 	
Given everything that had happened there was only one 	Given everything that had happened, there was only one 	Comma 	
the chintzy arm chair 	the chintzy armchair 	Should be one word 	
and gets stamped in triplicate ." 	and gets stamped in triplicate." 	Remove space before period 	
"Smith snorted. "Rather you than me 	Smith snorted. "Rather you than me 	Remove extraneous quote 	
Err…What had she just been thinking? 	Err… What had she just been thinking? 	Space 	
Do I need to go on? 	Do I need to go on?" 	Add closing quote 	
hissed, $open$, and scrambled inside. 	hissed, §open§, and scrambled inside. 	 	
in view, and hissed, "$Open$,". 	in view, and hissed, "§Open§,".