Editing 7

== make index ==
== Chapter 34 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
The coast line was still a stone's 	The coastline was still a stone's 	 	
enacting of the international statute of secrecy 	enacting of the International Statute of Secrecy 	Capitalize 	
was not without it's consequences 	was not without its consequences 	Remove apostrophe 	
not until a time travelling someone 	not until a time-travelling someone 	Hyphen 	
the floo at the rookery 	the floo at the Rookery 	Capitalize 	
laying on her tummy 	lying on her tummy 	Typo 	
future sister wife 	future sister-wife 	Hyphen 	
newspaper cutouts pilled up 	newspaper cutouts piled up 	Typo 	
Luna stuffed the pudding filled spoon 	Luna stuffed the pudding-filled spoon 	Hyphen 	
a ceiling mounted mobile 	a ceiling-mounted mobile 	Hyphen 	
startled red-headed witch appeared 	startled redheaded witch appeared 	Should be one word 	
Daphne stared, wide eyed 	Daphne stared, wide-eyed 	Hyphen 	
Weasley paused in mid hand-glow 	Weasley paused in mid-hand-glow 	Hyphen 	
Up in a cheaply built watch tower 	Up in a cheaply built watchtower 	Should be one word 	
Goldtooth clan surveyed the night-time sea 	Goldtooth clan surveyed the nighttime sea 	Should be one word 	
Great Grandfather is certain the target 	Great-Grandfather is certain the target 	Hyphen 	
like a worn out dementor's cloak 	like a worn-out dementor's cloak 	Hyphen 	
moved to her side as thought it were still midday 	moved to her side as though it were still midday 	Typo 	
withdrew her shrunken nimbus 1700 	withdrew her shrunken Nimbus 1700 	Capitalize 	
an heiress shaped shimmer moved behind her 	an heiress-shaped shimmer moved behind her 	Hyphen 	
the otherwise invisible magic sphere 	the otherwise-invisible magic sphere 	Hyphen 	
eye of kilrogg 	Eye of Kilrogg 	All occurences 	
Ginny tried to grasp onto the thought 	Ginny tried to grasp on to the thought 	Should be two words 	
together they re-mounted the broom 	together they remounted the broom 	Should be one word 	
Mmm…I wonder if I should… 	Mmm… I wonder if I should… 	Space 	
Morning song birds trilled 	Morning songbirds trilled 	Should be one word 	
the otherwise deserted road 	the otherwise-deserted road 	Hyphen 	
but her brain simply refused to co-operate 	but her brain simply refused to cooperate 	Should be one word 	
the ministry are co-operating to snoop 	the ministry are cooperating to snoop 	Should be one word 	
Daphne continued. "but while it's in transit 	Daphne continued. "But while it's in transit 	Capitalize, or change the period to a comma	
we dared not try move anything 	we dared not try to move anything 	Missing word 	
a large, round table of finest oak 	a large, round table of the finest oak 	Missing word 	
been able to use a wand in any-case 	been able to use a wand in any case 	Remove hyphen 	
She on the other hand, knew exactly 	She, on the other hand, knew exactly 	Comma 	
something half way between a nod and a bow 	something halfway between a nod and a bow 	Should be one word 	
we'd start with the low hanging fruit 	we'd start with the low-hanging fruit 	Hyphen 	
Daphne lightly brought her finger tips together 	Daphne lightly brought her fingertips together 	Should be one word 	
Wrist sized aluminium rings 	Wrist-sized aluminium rings 	Hyphen 	
the table contained several half signed contracts 	the table contained several half-signed contracts 	Hyphen 	
snatching the butter smeared copy 	snatching the butter-smeared copy 	Hyphen 	
copy of the daily prophet 	copy of the Daily Prophet 	Capitalize 	
a shocked looking Ginny 	a shocked-looking Ginny 	Hyphen 	
"We did." Fred said 	"We did," Fred said 	Change to comma 	
"Do, you think we should tell Harry 	"Do you think we should tell Harry 	Remove comma 	
setting the package down on a make-shift workbench 	setting the package down on a makeshift workbench 	Should be one word 	
Easiest sci-fi style oxygen and carbon-dioxide recyclers	Easiest sci-fi-style oxygen and carbon-dioxide recyclers	Hyphen 	
finished it by returned them back home 	finished it by returning them back home 	Typo 	
back home when the work day ended 	back home when the workday ended 	Should be one word 	
possibly one's with messy black hair 	possibly ones with messy black hair 	Remove apostrophe 	
already-completed first-half of the ritual 	already-completed first half of the ritual 	Remove hyphen 	
a plate of half eaten jam on toast 	a plate of half-eaten jam on toast 	Hyphen 	
like a goblin forged hammer 	like a goblin-forged hammer 	Hyphen 	
another fully inspected knight-wagon 	another fully inspected knight wagon 	Remove hyphen 	
stubbed it out with a steel toed boot 	stubbed it out with a steel-toed boot 	Hyphen 	
and then its called 'rebellion.' 	and then it's called 'rebellion.' 	Apostrophe 	
The ferry carrying the knight-wagon 	The ferry carrying the knight wagon 	Remove hyphen 	
back to the fidelius watch point 	back to the fidelius watchpoint 	Should be one word 	
Current heiress Greengrass and future Lady Slytherin 	Current Heiress Greengrass and future Lady Slytherin 	Capitalize 	
she were not something he wanted to deal with 	she was not something he wanted to deal with 	Typo 	
He produced a long fork like instrument 	He produced a long fork-like instrument 	Hyphen 	
an empty meeting room along side Lord Smith 	an empty meeting room alongside Lord Smith 	Should be one word 	
Daphne took out a rolled up parchment 	Daphne took out a rolled-up parchment 	Hyphen 	
Mr. / Mrs. 	Mr / Mrs 	Remove periods from all occurences 	
placed next to her tea-cup 	placed next to her teacup 	Should be one word 	
dried her hands on a teacloth 	dried her hands on a tea cloth 	Should be two words 	
doing so well on her end of year exams 	doing so well on her end-of-year exams 	Hyphens 	
her ever present imprisonment collar 	her ever-present imprisonment collar 	Hyphen 	
extremely well tested sticking charms 	extremely well-tested sticking charms 	Hyphen 	
"Moment of truth. One stroke now — slowly, please. 	"Moment of truth. One stroke now — slowly, please." 	Add closing quote 	
lights and sounds and make believe 	lights and sounds and make-believe 	Hyphen 	
equal size to the tree munching monstrosity 	equal size to the tree-munching monstrosity 	Hyphen 	
the muggles sitting nearby in their their cars 	the muggles sitting nearby in their cars 	Repeated "their" 	
by a much large set of jaws 	by a much larger set of jaws 	Typo 	
She left the cinema along side Hermione 	She left the cinema alongside Hermione 	Should be one word 	
to have me mistaken with pure bloods 	to have me mistaken with purebloods 	Should be one word 	
we decided to hide from the non magical world 	we decided to hide from the non-magical world 	Hyphen 	
invest in something so time consuming 	invest in something so time-consuming 	Hyphen 	
your parent's solution to our little problem 	your parents' solution to our little problem 	Move apostrophe 	
wondering if he's okay where-ever he is 	wondering if he's okay wherever he is 	Typo 	
twenty-two year old Hermione 	A memory of twenty-two-year-old Hermione 	Hyphens 	
and twenty-two year old Harry 	and twenty-two-year-old Harry 	Hyphens 	
her brand new nimbus 2001 broomstick 	her brand-new Nimbus 2001 broomstick 	Hyphen and capitalize 	
trio of mysterious rune covered metal boxes 	trio of mysterious rune-covered metal boxes 	Hyphen 	
A comfy looking chair had been placed 	A comfy-looking chair had been placed 	Hyphen 	
Clare's been working on that one 	"Clare's been working on that one 	Add opening quote 	
working on that one for ages now. "I can't tell you 	working on that one for ages now. I can't tell you 	Remove extraneous quote 	
horse power 	horsepower 	All occurences 	
despite the weird as hell acceleration 	despite the weird-as-hell acceleration 	Hyphens 	
through a different one way valve 	through a different one-way valve 	Hyphen 	
through a twenty centimetre circular hole 	through a twenty-centimetre circular hole 	Hyphen 	
row boat 	rowboat 	Multiple occurences 	
Its human looking passenger sat slouched 	Its human-looking passenger sat slouched 	Hyphen 	
The human had a two handed long sword 	The human had a two-handed long sword 	Hyphen 	
towards their intended target — Gairsay island 	towards their intended target — Gairsay Island. 	Capitalize and add period 	
the build up of latent magic on her skin 	the build-up of latent magic on her skin 	Hyphen 	
But it was the hill top that had most changed 	But it was the hilltop that had most changed 	Should be one word 	
building in solid looking white stone 	building in solid-looking white stone 	Hyphen 	
They made there way past a small clearing 	They made their way past a small clearing 	Typo 	
around the second floor overhang 	around the second-floor overhang 	Hyphen 	
the only room in the Manor 	the only room in the manor 	Lowercase 	
jutting out over her lip-stick red lips 	jutting out over her lipstick-red lips 	Move hyphen 	
the next set of set of doors 	the next set of doors 	Remove extra "set of" 	
The basement was a wide open floor 	The basement was a wide-open floor 	Hyphen 	
== Chapter 35 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
He half stumbled up 	He half-stumbled up 	 	
that felt all together too 	that felt altogether too 	 	
all stopped dead before the could reach him 	all stopped dead before they could reach him 	 	
and she must to be obtained legally 	and she must be obtained legally 	 	
but scoring below thevassal girl 	but scoring below the vassal girl 	Space 	
early enough for the night-time wanderers 	early enough for the nighttime wanderers 	Should be one word 	
lined the other-wise drab walls 	lined the otherwise-drab walls 	Should be one word, and add hyphen 	
opened them again." It will be close 	opened them again. "It will be close 	Move quote 	
we can give it our best shot. Five-thousand galleons 	we can give it our best shot. Five thousand galleons 	Remove hyphen 	
Five-thousand galleons was nearly a quarter 	Five thousand galleons was nearly a quarter 	Remove hyphen 	
[three weeks ago] 	[Three weeks ago] 	Capitalize 	
glared at his auror uniformed friend 	glared at his auror-uniformed friend 	Hyphen 	
some of those muggle's minds 	some of those muggles' minds 	Move apostrophe 	
hanging in mid air and gently spinning 	hanging in midair and gently spinning 	Should be one word 	
pick-up 	pickup 	Multiple occurrences 	
the now passing truck 	the now-passing truck 	Hyphen 	
dent the already badly damaged metal work 	dent the already badly damaged metalwork 	Should be one word 	
a pointblank range wandless stunner 	a point-blank-range wandless stunner 	Hyphens 	
pointed his hand-gun over the bonnet 	pointed his handgun over the bonnet 	Should be one word 	
into a plush looking office 	into a plush-looking office 	Hyphen 	
vulnerable mind like a combine-harvester 	vulnerable mind like a combine harvester 	Remove hyphen 	
After little over year 	After little over a year 	Missing word 	
reading in the Hogwarts library, self righteousness 	reading in the Hogwarts library, self-righteousness 	Hyphen 	
destruction plowing straight through the office 	destruction ploughing straight through the office 	British spelling 	
He straitened up 	He straightened up 	Typo 	
versions of his customary arm chair 	versions of his customary armchair 	Should be one word 	
a broken stain-glass window of silk and magic 	a broken stained-glass window of silk and magic 	Typo 	
Harry pursued his lips 	Harry pursed his lips 	Typo 	
stalled for a second before re-starting 	stalled for a second before restarting 	Should be one word 	
the Lord Slytherin copy cat 	the Lord Slytherin copycat 	Should be one word 	
severing it's right arm clean off 	severing its right arm clean off 	Remove apostrophe 	
tusks, and vicious looking hoofs 	tusks, and vicious-looking hoofs 	Hyphen 	
It wasn't that Tebola was an Animagus 	It wasn't that Tebola was an animagus 	Lowercase 	
surprising for a graduate of Uagadu 	surprising for a graduate of Uagadou 	Typo 	
bounce off the muggle born trio's apparition ward 	bounce off the muggleborn trio's apparition ward 	Should be one word 	
muggles around here make all make their money 	muggles around here all make their money 	Remove "make" 	
chunk of Gringotts legal payment 	chunk of Gringotts-legal payment 	Hyphen 	
The still upside down wizard 	The still-upside-down wizard 	Two hyphens 	
enough broken wood behind it to damn a river 	enough broken wood behind it to dam a river 	Typo 	
the now fading apparition ward 	the now-fading apparition ward 	Hyphen 	
Moment's later he was through 	Moments later he was through 	Remove apostrophe 	
peppering him with low level curses 	peppering him with low-level curses 	Hyphen 	
Russian ground to air missile systems 	Russian ground-to-air missile systems 	Hyphens 	
He aimed it at the fast approaching whirlwind 	He aimed it at the fast-approaching whirlwind 	Hyphen 	
Harry reached into a desk draw 	Harry reached into a desk drawer 	Typo 	
started taking pot shots 	started taking potshots 	Should be one word 	
accompanied by a victorious looking Tebola 	accompanied by a victorious-looking Tebola 	Hyphen 	
violations of the international statute of secrecy 	violations of the International Statute of Secrecy 	Capitalize 	
Uagadu was almost five-thousand kilometres 	Uagadou was almost five thousand kilometres 	Remove hyphen and fix typo 	
Blond hair and blue eyes 	Blonde hair and blue eyes 	Typo 	
her finger nails hadn't grown all that long 	her fingernails hadn't grown all that long 	Should be one word 	
Who were these people! 	Who were these people? 	Change to question mark, or interrobang 	
The rich looking man left 	The rich-looking man left 	Hyphen 	
an equally well-off looking woman 	an equally well-off-looking woman 	Hyphen 	
something half-way between a slap and a punch 	something halfway between a slap and a punch 	Should be one word 	
running down her now puffy cheeks 	running down her now-puffy cheeks 	Hyphen 	
The build up of toxins in the body 	The build-up of toxins in the body 	Hyphen 	
After an epic ten hours chase 	After an epic ten-hour chase 	Hyphen and remove s 	
he could barley walk in a straight line 	he could barely walk in a straight line 	Typo 	
Uagadou was a clay baked monument 	Uagadou was a clay-baked monument 	Hyphen 	
on top of a tree covered mountain 	on top of a tree-covered mountain 	Hyphen 	
a pair of African woman 	a pair of African women 	Make plural 	
Uagadou's great hall wasn't anything like Hogwart's 	Uagadou's great hall wasn't anything like Hogwarts' 	Move apostrophe 	
fell out of the second-to-last-book 	fell out of the second-to-last book 	Remove last hyphen 	
smile through her still flowing tears 	smile through her still-flowing tears 	Hyphen 	
a beaming seventeen year old girl 	a beaming seventeen-year-old girl 	Hyphens 	
shouted at the now hanging man 	shouted at the now-hanging man 	Hyphen 	
Julia stared wide eyed at the page 	Julia stared wide-eyed at the page 	Hyphen 	
He stepped away from he window 	He stepped away from the window 	Typo 	
I do not intent to outfly them 	I do not intend to outfly them 	Typo 	
the shape of long dead alumni 	the shape of long-dead alumni 	Hyphen 	
the thousand year old African school 	the thousand-year-old African school 	Hyphens 	
that Lord Slytherin copy-cat 	that Lord Slytherin copycat 	Should be one word 	
straightening the pillow case 	straightening the pillowcase 	Should be one word 	
'It worked, Tom!' It worked!' 	'It worked, Tom! It worked!' 	Remove extraneous quote 	
why don't you tell me more 	Why don't you tell me more 	Capitalize 	
were several silk lined, lead boxes all packed together	were several silk-lined lead boxes, all packed together	Move comma and add hyphen 	
retrieved the still drugged body 	retrieved the still-drugged body 	Hyphen 	
until we can find someway to extract the obscurus 	until we can find some way to extract the obscurus 	Should be two words 	
to leave an uncared for wizard dead 	to leave an uncared-for wizard dead 	Hyphen 	
a blindfold pressed against ones eyes 	a blindfold pressed against one's eyes 	Apostrophe 	
The pain reached more than she could bare 	The pain reached more than she could bear 	Typo 	
the blind fold, taken off 	the blindfold, taken off 	Should be one word 	
the Malfoy's would never have agreed 	the Malfoys would never have agreed 	Remove apostrophe 	
in a well to do suburb of London 	in a well-to-do suburb of London 	Hyphens 	
a suspiciously book shaped birthday present 	a suspiciously book-shaped birthday present 	Hyphen 	
a more box shaped wrapped gift 	a more box-shaped wrapped gift 	Hyphen 	
Daphne tuned back to the door 	Daphne turned back to the door 	Typo 	
said the brown haired girl 	said the brown-haired girl 	Hyphen 	
A faint memory of a sword wielding Slytherin 	A faint memory of a sword-wielding Slytherin 	Hyphen 	
She was only an eleven year old girl 	She was only an eleven-year-old girl 	Hyphens 	
Please dis-robe 	Please disrobe 	Should be one word 	
His new adoptive step-mother 	His new adoptive stepmother 	Should be one word 	
Julia's ice blue eyes had darkened 	Julia's ice-blue eyes had darkened 	Hyphen 	
an armchair in one of Grimmauld place's 	an armchair in one of Grimmauld Place's 	Capitalize 	
a pattern on the chair's arm rest 	a pattern on the chair's armrest 	Should be one word 	
on the other, other, other, other, hand 	on the other, other, other, other hand 	Remove last comma 	
who I might have been with 	whom I might have been with 	Typo 	
for the rest of the Summer 	for the rest of the summer 	Lowercase 	
quiet, subtle, and razor sharp 	quiet, subtle, and razor-sharp 	Hyphen 	
open line of shot for a one hit kill 	open line of shot for a one-hit kill 	Hyphen 	
tapped a rhythm on the arm chair rest 	tapped a rhythm on the armchair rest 	Should be one word 	
Sirius' looked uncomfortable 	Sirius looked uncomfortable 	Remove apostrophe 	
she'd brought the troll slaying witches 	she'd brought the troll-slaying witches 	Hyphen 	
play room 	playroom 	Multiple occurrences 	
take on a full grown mountain troll 	take on a full-grown mountain troll 	Hyphen (or change to "fully grown") 	
she'd read the daily prophet article 	she'd read the Daily Prophet article 	Capitalize 	
The Black library is quite the treasure trove 	The Black Library is quite the treasure trove 	Capitalize 	
winter festival 	Winter Festival 	Multiple occurrences 	
grant you a, non-conditional, guaranteed invitation 	grant you a non-conditional, guaranteed invitation 	Remove comma (also, maybe change to "unconditional"?)	
invitation to Slytherin House during the sorting— 	invitation to Slytherin House during the sorting—" 	Add closing quote 	
make our long term goals easier 	make our long-term goals easier 	Hyphen 	
purebloods were superior to halfbloods 	purebloods were superior to half-bloods 	Hyphen 	
Virgo/Julia's thoughts 	"best to standardise on just italics", according to you	Consistency 	
== Chapter 36 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
his fourth year in Ravenclaw house. 	his fourth year in Ravenclaw House. 	 	
Robert Longsdale — Ravenclaw house." 	Robert Longsdale — Ravenclaw House." 	 	
the frustrating space in-between 	the frustrating space in between 	Remove hyphen 	
during the winter festival 	during the Winter Festival 	Capitalize 	
the manor, Diagon Alley, her friend's houses 	the manor, Diagon Alley, her friends' houses 	Move apostrophe 	
a boring ten to fifteen minute whirring 	a boring ten- to fifteen-minute whirring 	Two hyphens 	
tangled with the dark lord 	tangled with the Dark Lord 	Capitalize 	
Nicholas Flamel 	Nicolas Flamel 	Typo 	
travelled under the North-Sea 	travelled under the North Sea 	Remove hyphen 	
beyond that front gate was almost unknown territory	beyond that front gate was almost-unknown territory	Hyphen 	
It was a toss up between dressing 	It was a toss-up between dressing 	Hyphen 	
The Manor itself 	The manor itself 	Lowercase 	
almost identical summer dresses 	almost-identical summer dresses 	Hyphen 	
as though that was in anyway a helpful observation 	as though that was in any way a helpful observation	Should be two words 	
Mrs. 	Mrs 	Multiple occurrences 	
You mean Applybe-in-Westmoreland? 	You mean Appleby-in-Westmoreland? 	Typo 	
Welcome to Applybe-in-Westmoreland 	Welcome to Appleby-in-Westmoreland 	Typo 	
A middle aged woman in a pointy hat 	A middle-aged woman in a pointy hat 	Hyphen 	
looked at the pastel coloured shop window 	looked at the pastel-coloured shop window 	Hyphen 	
gazed down at the half dozen solid gold coins 	gazed down at the half-dozen solid gold coins 	Hyphen 	
you want this kind of ice-cream? 	you want this kind of ice cream? 	Remove hyphen 	
a downward pointing, half invisible arrow 	a downward-pointing, half-invisible arrow 	Two hyphens 	
There, you go. It's for hanging things on 	There you go. It's for hanging things on 	Remove comma 	
The shop keeper reached down 	The shopkeeper reached down 	Should be one words 	
her purse for a one galleon coin 	her purse for a one-galleon coin 	Hyphen 	
licked her six story ice cream 	licked her six-story ice cream 	Hyphen 	
noisy, fast moving muggle vehicles 	noisy, fast-moving muggle vehicles 	Hyphen 	
in front of them in a never ending stream 	in front of them in a never-ending stream 	Hyphen 	
of cause there's weird stuff what goes on 	of course there's weird stuff that goes on 	Typos 	
suddenly cut out while half way down the A66 	suddenly cut out while halfway down the A66 	Should be one word 	
reach the pavement on other side 	reach the pavement on the other side 	Missing word 	
We are an Appleby family after-all 	We are an Appleby family, after all 	Remove hyphen and add comma	
finally gotten his guide license 	finally gotten his guide licence 	Noun form 	
Daphne's faintly glowing finger-tips 	Daphne's faintly glowing fingertips 	Should be one word 	
six duels with astonishingly even match-ups 	six duels with astonishingly even matchups 	Should be one word 	
a better kept Leaky Cauldron 	a better-kept Leaky Cauldron 	Hyphen 	
Shepherd's pie with butter beer 	Shepherd's pie with butterbeer 	Should be one word 	
much like the butter beer 	much like the butterbeer 	Should be one word 	
eating so much ice-cream for lunch 	eating so much ice cream for lunch 	Remove hyphen 	
made her way to the bar-counter 	made her way to the bar counter 	Remove hyphen