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== Chapter 24 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
scared 	scarred 	 	
Ginny eyes 	Ginny's eyes 	 	
attic was similarly 	attic were similarly 	 	
on which he'd sat, 	on which he'd sat 	no comma 	
tinniest 	tiniest 	 	
and the way the your fingers 	and the way your fingers 	 	
her identical twin brothers's retreating 	her identical twin brothers' retreating 	Remove s after apostrophe 	
the chamber of secrets 	the Chamber of Secrets 	Capitalize 	
said time travelling hero 	said time-travelling hero 	Hyphen 	
cutting up chicken breast for brining 	cutting up chicken breasts for brining 	Make plural (alternatively, "a chicken breast")	
for goodness sake 	for goodness' sake 	Apostrophe 	
The outside walls needs scrubbing 	The outside walls need scrubbing 	Typo 	
She pretend stumbled backwards, and pretend fell unconscious	She pretend-stumbled backwards, and pretend-fell unconscious	Not sure 	
I-let-my-girl-friend 	I-let-my-girlfriend 	Remove hyphen 	
possessed-by-the-dark-lord 	possessed-by-the-Dark-Lord 	Capitalize 	
She play duelled for a few 	She play-duelled for a few 	Hyphen 	
his glass of butter beer 	his glass of butterbeer 	Should be one word 	
slightly less worn night dress 	slightly less worn nightdress 	Not sure 	
a certain lightning bolt scared boy 	a certain lightning-bolt-scarred boy 	Two hyphens, and typo in "scarred" 	
buy at the second hand robe shop 	buy at the secondhand robe shop 	Should be one word 	
attacked me with fourth year spells 	attacked me with fourth-year spells 	Hyphen 	
being a long term time traveller 	being a long-term time traveller 	Hyphen 	
because in your mind scape 	because in your mindscape 	Should be one word 	
Self analysis is an important part 	Self-analysis is an important part 	Hyphen 	
A half dozen wizards 	A half-dozen wizards 	Hyphen 	
run over by the Knight bus 	run over by the knight bus 	For consistency with the rest of the story 	
helping her mum re-label various jars 	helping her mum relabel various jars 	Should be one word 	
changed into her going out robes 	changed into her going-out robes 	Hyphen 	
and dashed back down stairs 	and dashed back downstairs 	Alternatively, "down the stairs" 	
floo powder from the mantle piece 	floo powder from the mantlepiece 	Should be one word 	
Good Morning, Ginny 	Good morning, Ginny 	Lowercase 	
which over looked the Potter Manor 	which overlooked the Potter Manor 	Should be one word 	
it isn't crime to let a muggle 	it isn't a crime to let a muggle 	Missing word 	
chocolate frogs and gob-stones 	chocolate frogs and gobstones 	Remove hyphen 	
the next half hour 	the next half an hour 	British 	
any questions before mid morning break 	any questions before mid-morning break 	Hyphen 	
through the wizards own magic 	through the wizard's own magic 	Apostrophe 	
change on a case by case basis 	change on a case-by-case basis 	Two hyphens 	
into the now steaming compost heap 	into the now-steaming compost heap 	Hyphen 	
orders to wash her hands no more than three times 	orders to wash her hands no fewer than three times 	Makes no sense otherwise 	
today was floor sweeping day 	today was floor-sweeping day 	Hyphen 	
the tell-tale lack of sound 	the telltale lack of sound 	Should be one word 	
She scowled. … Nothing. 	She scowled. …Nothing. 	Remove space 	
finger tip 	fingertip 	Many occurences 	
her own occlumency induced fuzziness 	her own occlumency-induced fuzziness 	Hyphen 	
She felt the ever familiar magic 	She felt the ever-familiar magic 	Hyphen 	
her self inking quill. A self inking quill, which 	her self-inking quill. A self-inking quill, which 	Two hyphens 	
run her hands up the door way 	run her hands up the doorway 	Should be one word 	
Another one, half way up the door 	Another one, halfway up the door 	Should be one word 	
her parent's door to bang open 	her parents' door to bang open 	Move apostrophe 	
a similar set up to her bedroom door 	a similar setup to her bedroom door 	Should be one word 	
the backwall's darkness 	the back wall's darkness 	Should be two words 	
hard work had payed off 	hard work had paid off 	Typo 	
past her parent's bedroom door 	past her parents' bedroom door 	Move apostrophe 	
As she opened the trap door 	As she opened the trapdoor 	Should be one word 	
in a thicket of plum bushes two girls 	in a thicket of plum bushes, two girls 	Comma 	
she faced of against 	she faced off against 	Typo 	
Luna side stepped 	Luna sidestepped 	Should be one word 	
And It's so frustrating 	And it's so frustrating 	Lowercase 	
head on, and outlasted it 	head-on, and outlasted it 	Hyphen 	
with a beaters bat 	with a beater's bat 	Not sure 	
straight through her fingers-tips 	straight through her fingertips 	Or "fingers' tips" 	
"Shh shh." Harry whispered 	"Shh shh," Harry whispered 	Change to comma 	
Hold it there — Just like that 	Hold it there — just like that 	Lowercase 	
the vaguely wand length stick 	the vaguely wand-length stick 	Hyphen 	
Luna wasn't steam rolling her 	Luna wasn't steamrolling her 	Should be one word 	
her gray eyed, dirty-blonde haired nemesis 	her grey-eyed, dirty-blonde-haired nemesis 	Two hyphens and a typo 	
pointed his red glowing hand 	pointed his red-glowing hand 	Hyphen 	
work on two things — Detecting intent 	work on two things — detecting intent 	Lowercase 	
lowered her self to the ground 	lowered herself to the ground 	Should be one word 	
the otherwise quiet October morning 	the otherwise-quiet October morning 	Hyphen 	
Take a few mores steps 	Take a few more steps 	Typo 	
all distractions. "It's…a…stinger?" 	all distractions. "It's… a… stinger?" 	Spaces 	
a bolt of almost invisible magic 	a bolt of almost-invisible magic 	Hyphen 	
calling out the spell names before hand 	calling out the spell names beforehand 	Should be one word 	
fell into Luna's thrice damned 	fell into Luna's thrice-damned 	Hyphen 	
the Greengrass Heiress 	the Greengrass heiress 	Lowercase 	
Moments later, the violet eyed girl 	Moments later, the violet-eyed girl 	Hyphen 	
a silver lightning bolt ring 	a silver lightning-bolt ring 	Hyphen 	
on a need to know basis 	on a need-to-know basis 	Two hyphens 	
a thousand year old magically perfect killing machine 	a thousand-year-old magically perfect killing machine 	Two hyphens 	
The way I see it. Your major problem is 	The way I see it, your major problem is 	Change to comma 	
held up his non-stone holding hand 	held up his non-stone-holding hand 	Hyphen 	
the two-hundred odd hours 	the two hundred-odd hours 	Remove one hyphen and add another 	
in international standard rules duelling 	in international standard-rules duelling 	Hyphen 	
Carry huge ass iron shields 	Carry huge-ass iron shields 	Hyphen 	
know its not impossible 	know it's not impossible 	Apostrophe 	
I think its worth a shot 	I think it's worth a shot 	Apostrophe 	
long term plans, with short term goals 	long-term plans, with short-term goals 	Two hyphens 	
a gob stone in a bludger 	a gobstone in a bludger 	Should be one word 	
some fun with mid-air duelling 	some fun with midair duelling 	Should be one word 	
snatching practise time 	snatching practice time 	Noun form 	
capital letters on the black board 	capital letters on the blackboard 	Should be one word 	
Black Heiress 	Black heiress 	Multiple occurrences 	
the middle of Merlin damned Potter Manor 	the middle of Merlin-damned Potter Manor 	Hyphen 	
"You are aren't you?" 	"You are, aren't you?" 	Comma 	
smack down on Luna'? 	smack down on Luna'?" 	Add closing quote 	
long term plans and short term goals 	long-term plans and short-term goals 	Two hyphens 	
ruled by the dark lord 	ruled by the Dark Lord 	Capitalize 	
the leaf strewn ground 	the leaf-strewn ground 	Hyphen 	
we need a half dozen eggs 	we need a half-dozen eggs 	Hyphen 	
went through the motions, 	went through the motions. 	Change to period 	
Her view point shifted 	Her viewpoint shifted 	Should be one word 	
she felt a hammer like force 	she felt a hammer-like force 	Hyphen 	
back at The Rookery, once again 	back at the Rookery, once again 	Lowercase 	
until one found an opposing 	until one found an opening 	Typo 	
onto the leaf padded ground 	onto the leaf-padded ground 	Hyphen 	
Ginny sucked in huge gulp of air 	Ginny sucked in a huge gulp of air 	Alternatively, make "gulp" plural 	
An almost invisible Ginny 	An almost-invisible Ginny 	Hyphen 	
the frosty late December ground 	the frosty late-December ground 	Hyphen 	
seeing her second eldest brother 	seeing her second-eldest brother 	Hyphen 	
four separate Ginny Weasley sized coats 	four separate Ginny-Weasley-sized coats 	Two hyphens 	
caress her skin her like a Luna-hurled stunner 	caress her skin like a Luna-hurled stunner 	Remove "her" 	
frisbeed the almost invisible hat 	frisbeed the almost-invisible hat 	Hyphen 	
the trunk was noting but a mirror 	the trunk was nothing but a mirror 	Typo 	
Harry's fidelius charmed secret passage way 	Harry's fidelius-charmed secret passageway 	Hyphen, and "passageway" should be one word 	
an Arctic snow storm 	an Arctic snowstorm 	Should be one word 	
platform 9 and 3/4 	Platform 9 and 3/4 	 	
understand, young lady? 	understood, young lady? 	I believe it should be past tense 	
some silty water 	some salty water 	letter wrong 	
showed in her face 	showed on her face 	not sure 	
Ginny lay in bed 	Ginny laying in bed 	 	
Control that 	Control, that 	comma 	
beaters bat, understand?" 	beaters bat, understood?" 	 	
she now cash  	she now cashed 	 	
This is patronus intent 	This is a/the patronus intent 	works without, too 	
"Oh, that it were that easy." 	"Oh, if it were that easy." 	wrong word 	
We don't know that's why 	We don't know whether that's why 	 	
and keep on slogging  	and kept on slogging  	 	
dominating magical Britain  	dominating Magical Britain  	 	
 	 	 	
 	 	 	
 	 	 	
== Chapter 25 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
a daughter of the house of Black." 	a daughter of the House of Black." 	 	
the house of Black. The bookcase 	the House of Black. The bookcase 	 	
outside her then friends houses 	outside her then friends' houses 	 	
and blew a fuse 	and blown a fuse 	 	
A total control can be 	Total control can be 	not sure 	
Diagon alley 	Diagon Alley 	Multiple occurrences 	
barely enough from two people 	barely enough for two people 	 	
red star 	red star 	you said on stream to remove it 	
boy who lived/boy-who-lived 	Boy-Who-Lived 	Many occurences. Capitalize on a case-by-case basis 	
black witch of the north 	Black Witch of the North 	Many occurences of both lowercase and uppercase. Make consistent	
all gathered round him 	all gathered around him 	Either works 	
looked around, dart like 	looked around, dart-like 	Hyphen 	
wearing a long night dress 	wearing a long nightdress 	Should be one word 	
a seventy foot long undead dragon 	a seventy-foot-long undead dragon 	Two hyphens 	
What a cop-out 	What a cop-out 	Hyphen 	
carefully extracted Volumes I,II, and III 	carefully extracted Volumes I, II, and III 	Space 	
" You're off to Hogwarts 	"You're off to Hogwarts 	Remove space 	
a wickedly sharp looking knife 	a wickedly sharp-looking knife 	Hyphen 	
outside her then friends houses 	outside her then-friends' houses 	Hyphen and apostrophe 	
the bookcase become an archway of books 	the bookcase became an archway of bookshelves 	Typo 	
framing a solid looking door 	framing a solid-looking door 	Hyphen 	
two ornate looking book stoppers 	two ornate-looking book stoppers 	Hyphen 	
There were only two book shelves 	There were only two bookshelves 	Should be one word 	
she eventually had children…one day 	she eventually had children… one day 	Space 	
reached for an interesting looking tome 	reached for an interesting-looking tome 	Hyphen 	
her leg rapidly turning enflamed 	her leg rapidly turning inflamed 	Typo 	
the now closed book-like door 	the now-closed book-like door 	Hyphen 	
regal and dignified looking man 	regal and dignified-looking man 	Hyphen 	
if its more important 	if it's more important 	Apostrophe 	
It is anti-doxy bite potion 	It is an anti-doxy-bite potion 	Missing word and hyphen 	
the blonde haired, gray eyed witch 	the blonde-haired, grey-eyed witch 	Two hyphens and a typo 	
her as yet unexplored birthday inheritance 	her as-yet-unexplored birthday inheritance 	Hyphen 	
Everyday, for hours and hours, 	Every day, for hours and hours, 	Should be two words 	
Her violet eyes firmed."Right. 	Her violet eyes firmed. "Right. 	Space 	
Didn't that meant that muggles 	Didn't that mean that muggles 	Typo 	
half way from her navel to her chest 	halfway from her navel to her chest 	Should be one word 	
who was not her god-mother 	who was not her godmother 	Should be one word 	
her father being John Potter's god-father 	her father being John Potter's godfather 	Should be one word 	
The red-headed witch then proceeded 	The redheaded witch then proceeded 	Should be one word 	
before loosing her balance 	before losing her balance 	Typo 	
she pulled a green coloured potion 	she pulled a green-coloured potion 	Hyphen 	
use one of these.' Lord Slytherin had said. 	use one of these,' Lord Slytherin had said. 	Change to comma 	
fixed on her half hidden face 	fixed on her half-hidden face 	Hyphen 	
it was difficult not too 	it was difficult not to 	Typo 	
in a then light family 	in a then-Light family 	Hyphen and capitalize 	
been a four on one affair 	been a four-on-one affair 	Two hyphens 	
produced an ornate looking green 	produced an ornate-looking green 	Hyphen 	
the row of house elf heads 	the row of house-elf heads 	Hyphen 	
the un-attended shop counter 	the unattended shop counter 	Should be one word 	
and the self preservation 	and the self-preservation 	Hyphen 	
an almost ten year old 	an almost ten-year-old 	Two hyphens 	
at the bottom most point 	at the bottommost point 	Should be one word 	
the ritual was complete — Something she'd 	the ritual was complete — something she'd 	Lowercase 	
the blood painted deathly hallow 	the blood-painted deathly hallow 	Hyphen 	
You shall then step out [...] to your will. 	You shall then step out [...] to your will. 	Italicize 	
Grimmauld place was a magical house 	Grimmauld Place was a magical house 	Capitalize 	
she could have been at the cost 	she could have been, at the cost 	Comma 	
Make sure to double-check and triple-check 	Make sure to double-check and triple-check 	Two hyphens 	
traced the black crest on the front 	traced the Black crest on the front 	Capitalize 	
placed it carefully on the table top 	placed it carefully on the tabletop 	Should be one word 	
the jar contained doxys 	the jar contained doxies 	Typo 	
The Doxy started to glow 	The doxy started to glow 	Lowercase 	
Luna tackle hugged her 	Luna tackle-hugged her 	Hyphen 	
"the Albion magics don't interfere 	"The Albion magics don't interfere 	Capitalize 	
central foci 	central focus 	Multiple occurences. Should be singular 	
your family is… was… light! The Lovegoods were light	your family is… was… Light! The Lovegoods were Light	Capitalize? 	
We were politically light 	We were politically Light 	Capitalize? 	
I had a great great uncle 	I had a great-great-uncle 	Two hyphens 	
with a circular stair case 	with a circular staircase 	Should be one word 	
the book shelves around the edge 	the bookshelves around the edge 	Should be one word 	
Right hand side 	Right-hand side 	Hyphen 	
pulled out green coloured potions 	pulled out green-coloured potions 	Hyphen 	
regarding her grown up self 	regarding her grown-up self 	Hyphen 	
walking down Knock-turn Alley 	walking down Knockturn Alley 	Should be one word 	
forcing her to re-adjust it 	forcing her to readjust it 	Should be one word 	
a much older-looking ghost 	a much-older-looking ghost 	Two hyphens 	
The dark robed ghost carelessly floated 	The dark-robed ghost carelessly floated 	Hyphen 	
the lighthouse's front door, 	the lighthouse's front door. 	Change to period 	
The would be rapist was tied up 	The would-be rapist was tied up 	Hyphen 	
the still struggling man 	the still-struggling man 	Hyphen 	
silent bolt of lightening 	silent bolt of lightning 	Typo 	
On the right hand side 	On the right-hand side 	Hyphen 	
On the left hand side 	On the left-hand side 	Hyphen 	
the ever faithful Metamorph Dolly 	the ever-faithful Metamorph Dolly 	Hyphen 	
a ten week old kitten 	a ten-week-old kitten 	Two hyphens 	
pounce at a moments notice 	pounce at a moment's notice 	Apostrophe 	
flittered her brand new bodyguard 	flittered her brand-new bodyguard 	Hyphen 	
Did The Boy Who Lived 	Did the Boy-Who-Lived 	Make "the" lowercase, and hyphenate 	
The gray witch's fingers 	The Gray Witch's fingers 	Capitalize 	
this side of the veil 	this side of the Veil 	Capitalize 	
the doxy's still warm body 	the doxy's still-warm body 	Hyphen 	
half skull dribbly candle holders 	half-skull dribbly candle holders 	Hyphen 	
flattened snake skin 	flattened snakeskin 	Should be one word 	
her bit hand 	her bitten hand 	not sure 	
Animagi the year  	animagi the year  	 	
All the girls' 	All the girls 	remove appostrophe? 	
 	 	 	
 	 	 	
 	 	 	
 	 	 	
 	 	 	
== Chapter 26 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
which as head auror  	which as chief auror  	 	
It made as thought to move, but A 	It made as though to move, but A 	 	
and across the country side as 	and across the countryside as 	 	
and the dislodged the sickle 	and dislodged the sickle 	 	
already been taught be him? 	already been taught by him? 	 	
I barley got 	I barely got 	 	
if its good enough 	if it's good enough 	 	
moving onto the stinging hex 	moving on to the stinging hex 	Should be two words 	
three times now — Once when 	three times now — once when 	Lowercase 	
Alex just managed to side step it 	Alex just managed to sidestep it 	Should be one word 	
attacked her en mass 	attacked her en masse 	Typo 	
infiltrating hard to get at places 	infiltrating hard-to-get-at places 	Three hyphens 	
Dad is the second largest donator 	Dad is the second-largest donator 	Hyphen 	
department of the regulation of control for magical creatures	Department for the Regulation and Control of Magical Creatures	Capitalize and fix multiple typos 	
long sleeved shirts 	long-sleeved shirts 	Hyphen 	
it is my license 	it is my licence 	Noun form 	
squeeze of a side along apparition 	squeeze of a side-along apparition 	Hyphen 	
The quintaped halted it's skittering 	The quintaped halted its skittering 	Remove apostrophe 	
in its wide open maw 	in its wide-open maw 	Hyphen 	
Alex re read the parchment 	Alex reread the parchment 	Should be one word 	
A half dozen other customers 	A half-dozen other customers 	Hyphen 	
the middle aged woman 	the middle-aged woman 	Hyphen 	
the plinth bound pensieve 	the plinth-bound pensieve 	Hyphen 	
the boy who lived was very powerful 	the boy-who-lived was very powerful 	Two hyphens 	
The red haired girl was up to something 	The red-haired girl was up to something 	Hyphen 	
brought her stunner half-way 	brought her stunner halfway 	Should be one word 	
with an un-ceremonial thud 	with an unceremonial thud 	Should be one word 	
she sat, cross legged, on the bed 	she sat, cross-legged, on the bed 	Hyphen 	
sufficient non Slytherin qualities 	sufficient non-Slytherin qualities 	Hyphen 	
Alex re-read the owl 	Alex reread the owl 	Should be one word 	
killing a tree for practise 	killing a tree for practice 	Noun form 	
She handed the The Dendromancer's Doomsday Book 	She handed The Dendromancer's Doomsday Book 	Remove "the" 	
stood in the Black library 	stood in the Black Library 	Capitalize 	
meet up some time soon 	meet up sometime soon 	Should be one word 	
our world's hard earned understanding 	our world's hard-earned understanding 	Hyphen 	
Luna sat crosslegged on the bed 	Luna sat cross-legged on the bed 	Hyphen 	
Alex paused, mid rant 	Alex paused, mid-rant 	Hyphen 	
"I…I didn't think…" 	"I… I didn't think…" 	Space 	
living space taking some of the furniture 	living space, taking some of the furniture 	Comma 	
the would be dark wizard rapist 	the would-be dark wizard rapist 	Hyphen 	
to the still protesting ghost 	to the still-protesting ghost 	Hyphen 	
inexplicably purple tinted ghost 	inexplicably purple-tinted ghost 	Hyphen 	
conjuring ghost like objects 	conjuring ghost-like objects 	Hyphen 	
F-Final ritual? Fuck Toys?" 	F-Final ritual? Fuck toys?" 	Lowercase 	
specially bought, non magical clothes 	specially bought, non-magical clothes 	Hyphen 	
to hear him say, the F-T word 	to hear him say the F-T word 	Remove comma 	
you cannot expect a Lord 	you cannot expect a lord 	Lowercase 	
if he can protect the Black library 	if he can protect the Black Library 	Capitalize 	
one paper lined box 	one paper-lined box 	Hyphen 	
stomped her feet in bring some warmth to them 	stomped her feet to bring some warmth to them 	Typo 	
Doing this naked didn't bare thinking about 	Doing this naked didn't bear thinking about 	Typo 	
The Deathly hallow started to glow red 	The deathly hallow started to glow red 	Lowercase 	
one massive tree like foot 	one massive tree-like foot 	Hyphen 	
The inferi tree slowly turned 	The inferius tree slowly turned 	Should be singular 	
a furiously pissed off inferi tree 	a furiously pissed-off inferius tree 	Hyphen, and "inferius" should be singular 	
The both caught their breath 	They both caught their breath 	Typo 	
frustrated by the fast moving pests 	frustrated by the fast-moving pests 	Hyphen 	
the now dangerous patch of forest 	the now-dangerous patch of forest 	Hyphen 	
twenty seconds of practise 	twenty seconds of practice 	Noun form 	
she said, sage like 	she said, sage-like 	Hyphen 	
befell ten year old witches 	befell ten-year-old witches 	Two hyphens 	
none of the middle aged wizards 	none of the middle-aged wizards 	Hyphen 	
ever been a ten year old witch 	ever been a ten-year-old witch 	Two hyphens 	
silver robes, emerald green mask 	silver robes, emerald-green mask 	Hyphen 	
then almost instantly become nothing 	then almost instantly became nothing 	Typo 	
what seemed to be a well appointed 	what seemed to be a well-appointed 	Hyphen 	
sat in the far most high back chair 	sat in the farmost high-back chair 	Hyphen, and "farmost" is one word? 	
riffle through her pockets 	rifle through her pockets 	Typo 	
The one's you need work 	The ones you need work 	Remove apostrophe 	
the House of Black…although also me 	the House of Black… although also me 	Space 	
Merlin how could giving someone something 	Merlin, how could giving someone something 	Comma 	
You know, if you needed it. 	You know, if you needed it." 	Add closing quote 	
for you spend a few months 	for you to spend a few months 	Missing word 	
I…I don't know if I'm comfortable 	I… I don't know if I'm comfortable 	Space 	
control him through her… 	control him through her…" 	Add closing quote 	
Her shoulder's fell 	Her shoulders fell 	Remove apostrophe 	
full out assault Grimmauld Place 	full-out assault Grimmauld Place 	Hyphen 	
the blond carried herself 	the blonde carried herself 	Typo 	
On the table in-between them 	On the table in between them 	Should be two words 	
They squeezed again and again she was glad 	They squeezed again, and again she was glad 	This reads like "again and again" applies to the squeezing. If it does, add a period instead after the second "again" 	
Huack Kuh kuh… Oh, wow 	Huack kuh kuh… Oh, wow 	Lowercase 	
memory of the first break in 	memory of the first break-in 	Hyphen 	
veil 	Veil 	Two occurrences 	
mist engulfed Greengrass manor 	mist engulfed Greengrass Manor 	Capitalize 	
He's buying a Manor? 	He's buying a manor? 	Lowercase 	
the Greengrass Heiress 	the Greengrass heiress 	Lowercase 	
the department of mysteries 	the Department of Mysteries 	Capitalize 	
snake skin 	snakeskin 	Multiple occurrences 	
October was drawing to a close 	October had drawn to a close 	In the next scene Alex finds out about the troll attack which happened on October 31st. It couldn't have drawn to a close	
== Chapter 27 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
Now her lord owned the sex contract" 	Now her lord owned the sex contract 	 	
gallons 	galleons 	 	
He held up contract from Volf. 	He held up the contract from Volf. 	 	
dried and flattened snake skin 	dried and flattened snakeskin 	Should be one word 	
exited from the snake skin adorned shop front 	exited from the snakeskin-adorned shop front 	Hyphen, and "snakeskin" is one word 	
shoulder length, blonde hair 	shoulder-length, blonde hair 	Hyphen 	
into her now sweaty body 	into her now-sweaty body 	Hyphen 	
sixteen or seventeen year old 	sixteen or seventeen-year-old 	Two hypehns 	
and two still wet eyes 	and two still-wet eyes 	Hyphen 	
"Oh, one of those clients." Jessica muttered 	"Oh, one of those clients," Jessica muttered 	Change to comma 	
pulled on her now repaired underwear 	pulled on her now-repaired underwear 	Hyphen 	
Clare stared at the floor boards. 	Clare stared at the floorboards. 	Should be one word 	
tall and poised, with long blonde hair 	tall and poised, with long blond hair 	Typo 	
a silver snake topped cane 	a silver snake-topped cane 	Hyphen 	
an actual lord — And magical lords 	an actual lord — and magical lords 	Lowercase 	
The man then silently lead her 	The man then silently led her 	Typo 	
over the now shut woodwork 	over the now-shut woodwork 	Hyphen 	
He lead her over to the trunk 	He led her over to the trunk 	Typo 	
jeans and a button up shirt 	jeans and a button-up shirt 	Hyphen 	
some orange coloured liquid 	some orange-coloured liquid 	Hyphen 	
half way through my A-levels 	halfway through my A-levels 	Should be one word 	
a great part time job offer 	a great part-time job offer 	Hyphen 	
The kind of thing a muggle born signs 	The kind of thing a muggleborn signs 	Should be one word 	
a non magical police station 	a non-magical police station 	Hyphen 	
tried for a medium class breach 	tried for a medium-class breach 	Hyphen 	
if that's even possible — They may not 	if that's even possible — they may not 	Lowercase 	
mesh with the ultra intimidating visage 	mesh with the ultra-intimidating visage 	Hyphen 	
down at her half finished meal 	down at her half-finished meal 	Hyphen 	
as thought getting ready 	as though getting ready 	Typo 	
into a deep an unknown sea . 	into a deep and unknown sea. 	Typo, and remove space before period 	
Court room six, my lord 	Courtroom six, my lord 	Should be one word 	
walked into the court room 	walked into the courtroom 	Should be one word 	
who the court scribe had identified 	whom the court scribe had identified 	Typo 	
looked like cabbage size clover 	looked like cabbage-size clover 	Hyphen 	
the home she'd grown up in — Although 	the home she'd grown up in — although 	Lowercase 	
wand use is a legal gray area 	wand use is a legal grey area 	Typo 	
pre-empt all possible problems 	preempt all possible problems 	Should be one word 	
from selling the dental practise 	from selling the dental practice 	c for noun form 	
a zero or near zero magical environment 	a zero or near-zero magical environment 	Hyphen 	
she'd be sold on again 	she'd be sold off again 	Not sure 	
settling in to their place 	settling into their place 	Should be one word 	
to make sure muggle-born parents 	to make sure muggleborn parents 	Remove hyphen 	
all the other muggle-born parent's minds 	all the other muggleborn parents' minds 	Remove hyphen and move apostrophe 	
a normal frog shaped chocolate 	a normal frog-shaped chocolate 	Hyphen 	
Emma at the dinning room table 	Emma at the dining room table 	Typo 	
A huge two legged monster 	A huge two-legged monster 	Hyphen 	
fought it to a stand still 	fought it to a standstill 	Should be one word 	
another one hundred some odd years 	another hundred-some-odd years 	Two hyphens and (maybe?) remove "one" 	
re-order our calling cards again 	reorder our calling cards again 	Should be one word 	
a thirteen and a half inch yew and phoenix feather wand	a thirteen-and-a-half-inch yew and phoenix feather wand	Four hyphens 	
flash of emerald green sparks 	flash of emerald-green sparks 	Hyphen 	
the same level, even tone. "allow me 	the same level, even tone. "Allow me 	Capitalize (alternatively, change to a comma)	
one of our seventh year students 	one of our seventh-year students 	Hyphen 	
Clare nodded. "Thank you, Ma'am. 	Clare nodded. "Thank you, Ma'am." 	Add closing quote 	
the storybook style decor 	the storybook-style decor 	Hyphen 	
the equally storybook style hallway 	the equally storybook-style hallway 	Hyphen 	
a sturdy looking wooden fence 	a sturdy-looking wooden fence 	Hyphen 	
her much younger class mates 	her much younger classmates 	Should be one word 	
stared going over the section 	started going over the section 	Typo 	
only use ministry approved spells 	only use ministry-approved spells 	Hyphen 	
She pointed her brand new wand 	She pointed her brand-new wand 	Hyphen 	
ahead of some of her class mates 	ahead of some of her classmates 	Should be one word 	
they were eleven year olds 	they were eleven-year-olds 	Two hyphens 	
your parents still aren't? Part time job?" 	your parents still aren't? Part-time job?" 	Hyphen 	
"I…I…" she stuttered. 	"I… I…" she stuttered. 	Space 	
"Umm.. Okay." 	"Umm… Okay." 	Change to ellipses 	
has its own built in limitations 	has its own built-in limitations 	Hyphen 	
to find a bright eyed Emma 	to find a bright-eyed Emma 	Hyphen 	
Emma with half lidded eyes 	Emma with half-lidded eyes 	Hyphen 	
They have the 'The Hogwarts Buccaneers' 	They have 'The Hogwarts Buccaneers' 	Remove "the" 	
Persona non gratus 	Persona non grata 	Typo 	
that wasn't called for. but you must admit 	that wasn't called for, but you must admit 	Change to comma 	
A small figure with wavy-brow-hair 	A small figure with wavy brown hair 	Typo in "brown", and remove hyphens 	
you're still a second class citizen 	you're still a second-class citizen 	Hyphen 	
listening to a twelve-years-old 	listening to a twelve-year-old 	Typo 	
sat in opposite arm chairs 	sat in opposite armchairs 	Should be one word 	
in a high magical environment 	in a highly magical environment 	Alternatively, "high-magic" 	
a way from the non magical world 	a way from the non-magical world 	Hyphen 	
Clare had broadly came to terms 	Clare had broadly come to terms 	Typo 	
6,100 galleons, 6,200 , 6,400, 6,800 	6,100 galleons, 6,200, 6,400, 6,800 	Remove space before comma 	
the last one' left in the room 	the last ones left in the room 	Remove apostrophe 	
drawing closer to them "One of the sellers 	drawing closer to them. "One of the sellers 	Period 	
old, balding, bot bellied 	old, balding, potbellied 	Typo 	
a neutral third part location — Somewhere suitable 	a neutral third-party location — somewhere suitable 	Typo, hyphen, and lowercase 	
breaking the international statute of secrecy 	breaking the International Statute of Secrecy 	Capitalize 	
who gaze was still fixed 	whose gaze was still fixed 	Typo 	
pretty little thing isn't she? 	pretty little thing, isn't she? 	Comma 	
Oh well," He gave a dramatic sigh 	Oh well." He gave a dramatic sigh 	Change to period 	
as though from no-where 	as though from nowhere 	Remove hyphen 	
a massive column of flame 	a massive column of flames 	Plural 	
re-appearing in front of Lord Slytherin 	reappearing in front of Lord Slytherin 	Should be one word 	
build a submarine could you? 	build a submarine, could you? 	Comma 	
an all white room smelling of disinfectant 	an all-white room smelling of disinfectant 	Hyphen 	
with aristocratic features, long blonde hair 	with aristocratic features, long blond hair 	Typo 	
a silver-snake topped cane 	a silver-snake-topped cane 	Hyphen 	
in a wheezy, half dead voice 	in a wheezy, half-dead voice 	Hyphen 	
a medium sized purse of gold 	a medium-sized purse of gold 	Hyphen 	
wars and bar room brawls 	wars and barroom brawls 	Should be one word 	
the warded bottom draw 	the warded bottom drawer 	Typo 	
an almost unnoticeable amount of magic 	an almost-unnoticeable amount of magic 	Hyphen 	
the now closed and presumably locked door 	the now-closed and presumably locked door 	Hyphen 	
the now unshrunk trunk 	the now-unshrunk trunk 	Hyphen 	
the still opened door 	the still-opened door 	Hyphen 	
her still messed up bed 	her still-messed-up bed 	Two hyphens 	
the still receding group 	the still-receding group 	Hyphen 	
the otherwise empty wood 	the otherwise-empty wood 	Hyphen 	
the otherwise darkened room 	the otherwise-darkened room 	Hyphen 	
the otherwise deserted Knockturn Alley 	the otherwise-deserted Knockturn Alley 	Hyphen 	
rows of otherwise empty beds 	rows of otherwise-empty beds 	Hyphen 	
== Chapter 28 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
the slot and the pride the House takes 	the slot and the pride the house takes 	 	
Of course, that was were he could 	Of course, that was where he could 	 	
benny hill 	Benny Hill 	 	
shrieking shack window 	Shrieking Shack window 	 	
how much of quirrell 	how much of Quirrell 	 	
Hermione's started pacing frantically 	Hermione's heart started pacing frantically 	word missing 	
My neither, 	Me neither 	 	
the power of his toxin filled mind, "That because 	the power of his toxin-filled mind, "that because 	Hyphen and lowercase 	
we mis…mis… er… got wrong the amount 	we mis… mis… er… got wrong the amount 	Space 	
"Yes, Boss." 	"Yes, boss." 	Lowercase 	
call some time over Christmas 	call sometime over Christmas 	Should be one word 	
Leader of the children of the Light 	leader of the children of the Light 	Lowercase? Not sure 	
then the chosen of fate and death 	then the chosen of Fate and Death 	Capitalize 	
an eleven year old heir to a noble house 	an eleven-year-old heir to a noble house 	Two hyphens 	
one in particular who he needed 	one in particular whom he needed 	Typo 	
one particularly cute third year girl 	one particularly cute third-year girl 	Hyphen 	
wide eyes of several second year girls 	wide eyes of several second-year girls 	Hyphen 	
You are a jumped up mudblood 	You are a jumped-up mudblood 	Hyphen 	
stepped though 	stepped through 	Typo 	
is a first edition copy of 'Hogwarts a History' 	is a first-edition copy of Hogwarts a History 	Hyphen, italics, and remove quotes 	
a near pathological book fetish 	a near-pathological book fetish 	Hyphen 	
accept this as a declaration of intention gift 	accept this as a declaration of intent gift 	Typo 	
"A declaration of intention gift. You do know what they are?" 	"A declaration of intent gift. You do know what they are?" 	Typo 	
Of…Of course I know 	Of… Of course I know 	Space 	
John frowned catching the book 	John frowned, catching the book 	Comma 	
Are you afraid of him! Does he hurt you! 	Are you afraid of him? Does he hurt you? 	Change to question marks, or interrobangs 	
What do you even know about him! 	What do you even know about him? 	Change to question mark, or interrobang 	
but getting that hair…" he looked back at Susan. "…I don't have a clue."	but getting that hair…" He looked back at Susan. 	Capitalize 	
shook her head and half brandished 	shook her head and half-brandished 	Hyphen 	
her thirteen inch Hazel and unicorn hair wand 	her thirteen-inch hazel and unicorn hair wand 	Hyphen and lowercase 	
an ear splitting grin 	an ear-splitting grin 	Hyphen 	
the ninety-ninth largest island 	the ninety-ninth-largest island 	Hyphen 	
in over one-hundred years 	in over one hundred year 	Remove hyphen 	
the only well known magical institution 	the only well-known magical institution 	Hyphen 	
include a two story circular ballroom 	include a two-story circular ballroom 	Hyphen 	
his first ever public social event 	his first-ever public social event 	Hyphen 	
a gruelling two hour hunt 	a gruelling two-hour hunt 	Hyphen 	
the 1992 end of year winter festival 	the 1992 end-of-year Winter Festival 	Two hyphens and capitalize 	
BOY WHO LIVED TO FACE SQUIB TWIN 	BOY-WHO-LIVED TO FACE SQUIB TWIN 	Two hyphens 	
John Potter, the boy who lived 	John Potter, the boy-who-lived 	Two hyphens 	
defeater of He Who Must Not Be Named 	defeater of He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named 	Hyphens (not sure) 	
as Gryffindor's first year duelling spot 	as Gryffindor's first-year duelling spot 	Hyphen 	
long time duelling expert 	longtime duelling expert 	Should be one word 	
Samuel Ratherberk (46), smiled 	Samuel Ratherberk (46) smiled 	Remove comma 	
reading too many boy who lived adventure books 	reading too many Boy-Who-Lived adventure books 	Capitalize and hyphenate 	
Lady Lilly Potter 	Lady Lily Potter 	Typo 	
The little known Harry Potter 	The little-known Harry Potter 	Hyphen 	
When asked about such a match up 	When asked about such a matchup 	Should be one word 	
from where he sat at in the middle 	from where he sat in the middle 	Remove "at", or "in" 	
to take a more hands on approach 	to take a more hands-on approach 	Hyphen 	
upright against her four poster bed's 	upright against her four-poster bed's 	Hyphen 	
… Your brother offered me a declaration 	…Your brother offered me a declaration 	Remove space 	
more cheerful then she'd heard all day 	more cheerful than she'd heard all day 	Typo 	
A first edition copy 	A first-edition copy 	Hyphen 	
I will have make sure 	I will have to make sure 	Missing word 	
to see thing far away 	to see things far away 	Typo 	
Our time too I think 	Our time too, I think 	Comma 	
a kind of echo location 	a kind of echolocation 	Should be one word 	
The first was the 'Eye of Kilrogg—' 	The first was the 'Eye of Kilrogg—'" 	Add closing quote 	
the moon and ghost light. "…brilliant." 	the moon and ghost light. "…Brilliant." 	Capitalize 	
let's start with threat seeing 	Let's start with threat seeing 	Capitalize 	
She forced the magic down through her self 	She forced the magic down through herself 	Should be one word 	
that she possible could 	that she possibly could 	Typo 	
but it was a loosing battle 	but it was a losing battle 	Typo 	
focusing with patronus like intensity 	focusing with patronus-like intensity 	Hyphen 	
the Slytherin first years girl's dormitory 	the Slytherin first-year girls' dormitory 	Hyphen, remove "s" from "years", and "girl's" should be plural (as in, 'women's restroom', etc.)	
following an eleven year old boy around 	following an eleven-year-old boy around 	Two hyphens 	
He soon found said eleven year old boy 	He soon found said eleven-year-old boy 	Two hyphens 	
jab the brother wand to Tom's and muttered 	jab the brother wand to Tom's and mutter 	Typo 	
rending any form of concealment 	rendering any form of concealment 	Typo 	
"What the hell had that been?" 	What the hell had that been? 	Remove quotes (or change to "What the hell was that?") 	
club meeting of the first year muggleborns 	club meeting of the first-year muggleborns 	Hyphen 	
although not the full on 'Harry Potter Method' 	although not the full-on 'Harry Potter Method' 	Hyphen 	
He preferred, "The Founder's Club," 	He preferred, "The Founders Club," 	For consistency with the rest of the story 	
that's something you don't see everyday 	that's something you don't see every day 	Should be two words 	
were other's would see 	where others would see 	Typo, and remove apostrophe 	
turned to a full on grin 	turned into a full-on grin 	Typo and hyphen 	
the most self important and pretentious 	the most self-important and pretentious 	Hyphen 	
quite an eye opener 	quite an eye-opener 	Hyphen 	
a good chunk of the Winter Break 	a good chunk of the winter break 	Lowercase 	
Or this one — 'the terrets jinx' 	Or this one — 'the Tourette's jinx' 	Typo 	
prank spells of you own 	prank spells of your own 	Typo 	
fiddling with the door knob 	fiddling with the doorknob 	Should be one word 	
followed by a howling with laughter Malfoy 	followed by a howling-with-laughter Malfoy 	Two hyphens 	
all the way to empty Slytherin common room 	all the way to the empty Slytherin common room 	Missing word 	
she finally barged it to the sanctuary of the girls dormitory 	she finally barged into the sanctuary of the girls' dormitory 	Typo and apostrophe 	
Slowly her tear stained face rose up 	Slowly her tear-stained face rose up 	Hyphen 	
Hermione looked up thought about it 	Hermione looked up and thought about it 	Missing word 	
this benny hill style rigmarole 	this Benny-Hill-style rigmarole 	Capitalize and hyphenate 	
flattened himself to the stone work 	flattened himself to the stonework 	Should be one word 	
pointedly ignoring the Headmaster 	pointedly ignoring the headmaster 	Lowercase 	
watching an eleven year old write essays 	watching an eleven-year-old write essays 	Two hyphens 	
it was like magic.' 	it was like magic.'" 	Add closing quote 	
along with the muggle authorities involvement 	along with the muggle authorities' involvement 	Apostrophe 	
endangerment of the international statute of secrecy 	endangerment of the International Statute of Secrecy 	Capitalize 	
jogged down the first floor corridor 	jogged down the first-floor corridor 	Hyphen 	
a horribly ugly floating green eyeball 	Everyone in the group can see the eyeball in this scene, despite it supposedly being "Invisible to unaltered human sight" (chapter 21)	Plothole? 	
lend you my new super powers 	lend you my new superpowers 	Should be one word 	
The winter festival had been productive 	The Winter Festival had been productive 	Capitalize 	
one of those, was getting some fresh goods 	one of those was getting some fresh goods 	Remove comma 	
He now had four fidelius charmed locations 	He now had four fidelius-charmed locations 	Hyphen 	
before shooting of again 	before shooting off again 	Typo 	
I've had it up to 'ear with this lot 	I've had it up to 'ere with this lot 	Typo 	
turn invisible on command 	Again, the eye of kilrogg is "Invisible to unaltered human sight" (chapter 21) 	Plothole? 	
As he happily waved good night to the girls 	As he happily waved goodnight to the girls 	Should be one word 	
his comfortable four poster bed 	his comfortable four-poster bed 	Hyphen 	
Victory this time, would be a full course banquet 	Victory this time would be a full course banquet 	Remove comma 	
just wondering what colour your hair 	Just wondering what colour your hair 	Capitalize 	
threw a tourettes jinx 	threw a Tourette's jinx 	Capitalize/Apostrophe 	
Damn how powerful was Granger? 	Damn, how powerful was Granger? 	Comma 	
an almost demented grin 	an almost-demented grin 	Hyphen 	
"was the oedipus jinx… 	"was the Oedipus jinx…" 	Add closing quote and capitalize 	
while barely managing to side step 	while barely managing to sidestep 	Should be one word 	
only for it to not move a Merlin damned inch 	only for it to not move a Merlin-damned inch 	Hyphen 	
Granger, how about it we— 	Granger, how about we— 	Not sure? Depends what Draco was trying to say 	
a half dozen hexes hit him 	a half-dozen hexes hit him 	Hyphen 	
occasionally hiding a snort into a pillow 	occasionally hiding a snort in a pillow 	Typo 	
with pink polka dotted skin 	with pink polka-dotted skin 	Hyphen 	
wiped his cloak around him 	whipped his cloak around him 	Typo (Alternatively "wrapped") 	
"Homenum Revelo." 	"Homenum Revelio." 	Typo 	
a rather confused looking Dumbledore left 	a rather confused-looking Dumbledore left 	Hyphen 	
He didn't look too happy did he? 	He didn't look too happy, did he? 	Comma 	
Are you sure I can't just Hex him 	Are you sure I can't just hex him 	Lowercase 	
we still want stay 	we still want to stay 	Missing word 	
reason to get you in trouble. 	reason to get you in trouble." 	Add closing quote 	
John Potter marched away from the Library 	John Potter marched away from the library 	Lowercase 	
during History of Magic 	during history of magic 	Lowercase 	
Malfoy gave him a deadpanned look 	Malfoy gave him a deadpan look 	Typo 	
Slytherin is ready submit 	Slytherin is ready to submit 	Missing word 	
he saw the true boy who lived 	he saw the true boy-who-lived 	Two hyphens 	
help of the Black Heiress 	help of the Black heiress 	Lowercase 	
The healer's Art — Twenty-sixth Edition 	The Healer's Art — Twenty-sixth Edition 	Capitalize 	
If You Cant Beat Them, Prank Them 	If You Can't Beat Them, Prank Them 	Apostrophe 	
whose only use was as a Daughter 	whose only use was as a daughter 	Lowercase 	
Harry left the Shrieking Shack in high spirits 	Harry left the shrieking shack in high spirits 	Lowercase 	
bite though his warming charms 	bite through his warming charms 	Typo 	
stopping in mid air 	stopping in midair 	Should be one word 	
Homenum revelio 	Homenum Revelio 	Multiple occurrences 	
His eyes widened slightly. An anti apparition ward 	His eyes widened slightly. An anti-apparition ward 	Hyphen 	
transformed into Lord Black complete with Auror shield 	transformed into Lord Black, complete with auror shield 	Comma and lowercase 	
the most powerful smell obliterating tergeo spell 	the most powerful smell-obliterating tergeo spell 	Hyphen 	
Sweating, fighting down the urge to panic. Harry flew 	Sweating, fighting down the urge to panic, Harry flew 	Change to comma 	
sat crosslegged on the ground 	sat cross-legged on the ground 	Hyphen 	
to water spells, and chalk, Animagus Revelio, and elemental wind 	to water spells, chalk, animagus revelio, and elemental wind 	Lowercase, and remove "and" 	
pointed his wand at the wardstone 	pointed his wand at the ward stone 	Should be two words 	
his situation on his lightning bolt ring 	his situation on his lightning-bolt ring 	Hyphen 	
the money to build the manor, came from drug smuggling 	the money to build the manor came from drug smuggling 	Remove comma 	
Hermione sat crossed legged on her chair 	Hermione sat cross-legged on her chair 	Typo and hyphen 	
switch their gazes to Harry —Malfoy with a look 	switch their gazes to Harry — Malfoy with a look 	Space 	
one of the many maze like sections 	one of the many maze-like sections 	Hyphen 	
a secret, parseltongue only secret passageway 	a secret, parseltongue-only secret passageway 	Hyphen 	
He walked up the passageway whistling as he went 	He walked up the passageway, whistling as he went 	Comma? 	
"Oh, come on! John waved the new book 	"Oh, come on!" John waved the new book 	Add closing quote 	
in obvious frustration. What's so bad about me 	in obvious frustration. "What's so bad about me 	Add opening quote 	
some old looking books 	some old-looking books 	Hyphen 	
a small flame on it's tip." 	a small flame on its tip. 	Remove apostrophe and extraneous quote 	
Tracey was slack jawed 	Tracey was slack-jawed 	Hyphen 	
the show down in front of him 	the showdown in front of him 	Should be one word 	
almost in hysterics. "OR I"LL STOP YOU!" 	almost in hysterics. "OR I'LL STOP YOU!" 	Change double quote to apostrophe 	
the ziz-zag corridor already a war zone 	the zigzag corridor already a war zone 	Typo 	
stood his long time pursuer 	stood his longtime pursuer 	Should be one word 	
Hermione could hold onto 	Hermione could hold on to 	Should be two words 	
message you with our lightning bolt rings 	message you with our lightning-bolt rings 	Hyphen 	
"I'll see you back in the common room. 	"I'll see you back in the common room." 	Add closing quote 	
he'd been a full time teacher 	he'd been a full-time teacher 	Hyphen 	
neutral and respectful. His gaze giving neither 	neutral and respectful, his gaze giving neither 	Change to comma 	
notice that the spot he choose 	notice that the spot he chose 	Typo 	
he looked over his moon shaped glasses 	he looked over his moon-shaped glasses 	Hyphen 	
far more advanced then any first year 	far more advanced than any first year 	Typo 	
What ever it is isn't going to happen 	Whatever it is isn't going to happen 	Should be one word 	
leeriness his peers would have to a muggle 	leeriness his peers would have towards a muggle 	Clarity 	
a muggle raised, squib-mistaken, half-blood 	a muggle-raised, squib-mistaken, half-blood 	Hyphen 	
"Like my parents, Sir?" 	"Like my parents, sir?" 	Lowercase 	
He figured a well brought up child 	He figured a well-brought-up child 	Two hyphens 	
and that, was perhaps more worrying 	and that was perhaps more worrying 	Remove comma 	
The almost glowing white of its hair 	The almost-glowing white of its hair 	Hyphen 	
It's not far. You can help it right? 	It's not far. You can help it, right? 	Comma 	
Hermione's started pacing frantically. 	Hermione started pacing frantically. 	Typo 	
And be sure to message, Harry 	And be sure to message Harry 	Remove comma 	
he flicked his wand his at the end 	he flicked his wand at the end 	Remove "his" 	
sitting knee deep in 	sitting knee-deep in 	Hyphen 	
They were sitting in a Merlin damned field 	They were sitting in a Merlin-damned field 	Hyphen 	
the size of one of the Hogwart's greenhouses 	the size of one of the Hogwarts greenhouses 	Remove apostrophe 	
they managed to catch, at least some of it 	they managed to catch at least some of it 	Remove comma 	
looked up at her with pain filled eyes 	looked up at her with pain-filled eyes 	Hyphen 	
to see what the corpse possessing Dark Lord 	to see what the corpse-possessing Dark Lord 	Hyphen 	
the still glowing unicorn was on its feet 	the still-glowing unicorn was on its feet 	Hyphen 	
grabbing a still whimpering Hermione 	grabbing a still-whimpering Hermione 	Hyphen 	
spells raining down around it them 	spells raining down around them 	Remove "it" 	
her lightning bolt ring 	her lightning-bolt ring 	Hyphen 	
a flash-flood of raw, uncontrolled magic 	a flash flood of raw, uncontrolled magic 	Remove hyphen 	
tall and powerful, stood in a semi-circle 	tall and powerful, stood in a semicircle 	Should be one word 	
as six arrow heads zipped straight 	as six arrowheads zipped straight 	Should be one word 	
going into full scale magical meltdown 	going into full-scale magical meltdown 	Hyphen 	
"Thank you for saving us." Daphne said. 	"Thank you for saving us," Daphne said. 	Change to comma 	
we simple ask that 	we simply ask that 	Typo 	
Hermione stilled, wide eyed 	Hermione stilled, wide-eyed 	Hyphen? 	
I daresay, he is in need of your help 	I daresay he is in need of your help 	Remove comma 	
And with an adrenaline fuelled jolt 	And with an adrenaline-fuelled jolt 	Hyphen 	
a protective bubble of almost pure magic 	a protective bubble of almost-pure magic 	Hyphen 	
reinforced by transfigured stonework, and conjured titanium 	reinforced by transfigured stonework and conjured titanium 	Remove comma 	
now laying unconscious 	now lying unconscious 	Typo 	
they though he might be 	they thought he might be 	Typo 	
lead him to one painful conclusion 	led him to one painful conclusion 	Typo 	
he could maneuver for young Harry 	he could manoeuvre for young Harry 	Typo