Aptitude Test/Ryan

Name: Ryan
Gender: Male
Parents Faction: Erudite
Desired Faction: Dauntless
Least Desired Faction: Amity
Current Age: 12
Appearance: Normal-looking, with great knowledge, thin, black hair, black eyes, short
Personality: Kind, smart, funny, sensible
History: Parents are smart so they moved to Erudite, had a baby, they hoped he would follow their steps. He was born, years passed, he became smart but he didn't want to live in a faction where everybody was smart, he wants to be free. So he decides to go to Dauntless. 
Weapons: He prefers a scoped assault rifle and a knife.
==Comments==
Some minor issues:
*Please expand the appearance to at least 3-4 sentences. If you provide an image, then no writing is needed in this section.
*Also, please add a last name to your character.
*Please expand the personality to at least full detailed paragraph.
*Please expand the history to at least 2-3 full paragraphs.
*Only Initiates or older can use weapons.
*Other than that, it looks fine for me.
Are you still working on this? If this doesn't have an edit for the 25th of September, it will be subject for deletion...
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