Editing 9

== Chapter 42 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
wizard hoped over 	wizard hopped over 	 	
her still human body 	her still-human body 	Depends. Is she sitting still? Or is it referring to her not being in her animagus form?	
Even in her dream-scape 	Even in her dreamscape 	Should be one word 	
the Slytherin girls dormitory 	the Slytherin girls' dormitory 	Apostrophe 	
wearing it everyday now 	wearing it every day now 	Should be two words 	
The Parkinson Heiress 	The Parkinson heiress 	Lowercase 	
a bit of a head-start 	a bit of a head start 	Remove hyphen 	
duffel-bag 	duffel bag 	Multiple occurrences 	
the Greengrass Heiress 	the Greengrass heiress 	Lowercase 	
thanks to whomever had sent them 	thanks to whoever had sent them 	Typo 	
an already pregnant witch 	an already-pregnant witch 	Hyphen 	
a lady-like snort 	a ladylike snort 	Should be one word 	
two lined up ranks of battle tense soldiers 	two lined-up ranks of battle-tense soldiers 	Hyphens 	
at each others throats 	at each other's throats 	Apostrophe 	
the always empty Slytherin throne 	the always-empty Slytherin throne 	Hyphen 	
to the Slytherin Dungeons 	to the Slytherin dungeons 	Lowercase 	
a Saturday Morning 	a Saturday morning 	Lowercase 	
the second year student 	the second-year student 	Hyphen 	
Harry keyed polyjuice potion 	Harry-keyed polyjuice potion 	Hyphen 	
the third floor living quarters 	the third-floor living quarters 	Hyphen 	
Maintaining The Statute, by Samantha Goldstein 	Maintaining The Statute, by Samantha Goldstein 	Author's name should not be italics 	
Blood is Thicker than Magic, by Dracula 	Blood is Thicker than Magic, by Dracula 	Author's name should not be italics 	
The Way of the Warlock by Robert Dimwiddy 	The Way of the Warlock, by Robert Dimwiddy 	Comma, and author's name should not be italics 	
"No." Harry confirmed 	"No," Harry confirmed 	Change to comma 	
On Guerilla warfare, by Mao Zedong 	On Guerilla Warfare, by Mao Zedong 	Italicize and capitalize title 	
By our definition he was 	By our definition, he was 	Comma 	
a muggle hating Dark 	a muggle-hating Dark 	Hyphen 	
The History of The Peloponnesian War, by Thucydides	The History of the Peloponnesian War, by Thucydides	Lowercase "the", and author's name should not be italics 	
chat about school work 	chat about schoolwork 	Should be one word 	
top of Gairsay island 	top of Gairsay Island 	Capitalize 	
a hollowed out cavern 	a hollowed-out cavern 	Hyphen 	
some fifteen-metres long 	some fifteen metres long 	Remove hyphen 	
the fifteen metre long monstrosity 	the fifteen-metre-long monstrosity 	Hyphens 	
their brand new Slytherin Masks 	their brand-new Slytherin masks 	Hyphen and lowercase 	
back before mid-night 	back before midnight 	Should be one word 	
in-between her eyes 	in between her eyes 	Remove hyphen 	
the one who's mere presence 	the one whose mere presence 	Typo 	
the Auror department 	the auror department 	Lowercase 	
Numbers Guy 	numbers guy 	Or vice versa. Just needs to be consistent 	
broomstick grade wood 	broomstick-grade wood 	Hyphen 	
a hit and miss operation 	a hit-and-miss operation 	Hyphens 	
Gringotts' might have the key to 	Gringotts might have the key to 	Remove apostrophe 	
several places rather obvious places 	several rather obvious places 	Remove first "places" 	
young Heiress 	young heiress 	Multiple occurrences 	
a mist filled sphere 	a mist-filled sphere 	Hyphen 	
On War, by Carl von Clausewitz 	On War, by Carl von Clausewitz 	Author's name should not be italics 	
their opponents wands 	their opponents' wands 	Apostrophe 	
Ten-metre tall solid gold 	Ten-metre-tall solid gold 	Hyphen 	
far more office like 	far more office-like 	Hyphen 	
a long, red pony-tail 	a long, red ponytail 	Should be one word 	
The African Rift Valley 	the African Rift Valley 	Lowercase 	
Secured-Collateral said. "but there will be a price	Secured-Collateral said, "but there will be a price	Change to comma (or capitalize "but") 	
the dark lord had swept in 	the Dark Lord had swept in 	Capitalize 	
Merlin damned John Potter 	Merlin-damned John Potter 	Hyphen 	
the Bones Heiress 	the Bones heiress 	Lowercase 	
very well rehearsed sales patter 	very well-rehearsed sales patter 	Hyphen 	
the pensive starting glowing 	the pensieve starting glowing 	Typo 	
port-keying to later 	portkeying to later 	Should be one word 	
old fashioned look 	old-fashioned look 	Hyphen 	
I have chosen The Ritual of the Lady 	I have chosen the ritual of the lady 	Lowercase 	
middle of stone henge 	middle of Stonehenge 	Should be one word and capitalized 	
Then stripped down 	She then stripped down 	Altenatively, change end of previous sentence to a comma 	
just over twenty-thousand 	just over twenty thousand 	Remove hyphen 	
not so friendly matches 	not-so-friendly matches 	Hyphens? 	
to the another premium box 	to another premium box 	Remove "the" 	
in the Minster's box 	in the Minister's box 	Typo 	
their pre-game warm up 	their pregame warm-up 	Hyphen, and "pregame" is one word 	
away from the glass-wall 	away from the glass wall 	Remove hyphen 	
the Canons (the Canons lost massively) 	the Cannons (the Cannons lost massively) 	Typos 	
with Mrs. Granger and Clare 	with Mrs Granger and Clare 	Remove period 	
was baring the brunt of 	was bearing the brunt of 	Typo 	
zoomed into where 	zoomed in to where 	Should be two words 	
riding side saddle behind him 	riding side-saddle behind him 	Hyphen? 	
the Magpie's hands 	the Magpies' hands 	Move apostrophe 	
half-way through pouring 	halfway through pouring 	Should be one word 	
the Bat's beaters had pinned the Magpies's seeker 	the Bats' beaters had pinned the Magpies' seeker 	Fix apostrophes 	
Over the next few hours the Bats 	Over the next few hours, the Bats 	Comma 	
outflew the Magpies handedly 	outflew the Magpies handily 	Typo 	
a quick good bye 	a quick goodbye 	Should be one word 	
== Chapter 43 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
Potential plothole 	, in chapter 40 the bloody baron is referred to as the head of Slytherin, then in chapter 43 Snape is referred to as her head of house when speaking to Alex implying he is head of Slytherin	Not a plothole but a mistake 	
“My father is head auror!” 	“My father is chief auror!” 	 	
the second year girl's dormitory 	the second-year girls' dormitory 	Hyphen and move apostrophe 	
would be hard pressed 	would be hard-pressed 	Hyphen 	
tired looking Ginny 	tired-looking Ginny 	Hyphen 	
the boy's dormitory 	the boys' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
heading to the girls 	heading to the girls' 	Apostrophe 	
same time that lady lily 	same time that Lady Lily 	Captailize 	
middle aged witch 	middle-aged witch 	Hyphen 	
Luv 	luv 	Multiple occurrences 	
not, in anyway, a large affair 	not, in any way, a large affair 	Should be two words 	
two-hundred years previously 	two hundred years previously 	Remove hyphen 	
and The Emperor of 	and the Emperor of 	Lowercase 	
a half dozen carpets 	a half-dozen carpets 	Hyphen 	
clutching her Lord's arm 	clutching her lord's arm 	Lowercase 	
voice of the tour-guide 	voice of the tour guide 	Remove hyphen 	
the grand-father of dragons 	the grandfather of dragons 	Should be one word 	
The young Heiress 	The young heiress 	Lowercase 	
front of the Greengrass Heiress 	front of the Greengrass heiress 	Lowercase 	
The bent over woman 	The bent-over woman 	Hyphen 	
match what your looking for 	match what you're looking for 	Typo 	
at the outer-ring 	at the outer ring 	Remove hyphen 	
Only amateur's faces 	Only amateurs' faces 	Move apostrophe 	
A Slytherin Green scarf 	A Slytherin-green scarf 	Hyphen and lowercase 	
ward-stone/wardstone 	ward stone 	For consistency with the rest of the story 	
the tell-tell sign 	the telltale sign 	Typo 	
a hundred meters away 	a hundred metres away 	Typo 	
and a tried to drop her voice 	and tried to drop her voice 	Remove "a" 	
next to the Volcano 	next to the volcano 	Lowercase 	
the eye of kilrogg 	the Eye of Kilrogg 	Captailize 	
"Afternoon Tea." 	"Afternoon tea." 	Lowercase 	
an emerald green flame 	an emerald-green flame 	Hyphen 	
the Black Heiress 	the Black heiress 	Multiple occurrences 	
the Malfoy Heir 	the Malfoy heir 	Lowercase 	
"No," Draco quickly replied, "Nothing." 	"No," Draco quickly replied, "nothing." 	Lowercase, or change to period 	
same speed as a flobber worm 	same speed as a flobberworm 	Should be one word 	
first year girl 	first-year girl 	Multiple occurrences 	
Unraveling the Dark Arts 	Unravelling the Dark Arts 	British spelling? 	
watching the goings on 	watching the goings-on 	Hyphen 	
far from it. The Hogwarts Library 	far from it. The Hogwarts library 	Lowercase 	
without his parent's permission 	without his parents' permission 	Move apostrophe 	
the still struggling book 	the still-struggling book 	Hyphen 	
"Yes, Draco, Tonight." 	"Yes, Draco, tonight." 	Lowercase 	
Boy Who Lived 	Boy-Who-Lived 	Multiple occurrences 	
call you The Dark Heiress 	call you the Dark Heiress 	Lowercase 	
The Carrow twin's reaction 	The Carrow twins' reaction 	Move apostrophe 	
the two girl's faces 	the two girls' faces 	Move apostrophe 	
the second best way 	the second-best way 	Hyphen 	
Slytherin second year's girl's dormitory 	Slytherin second-year girls' dormitory 	Remove "'s" from "year's", add hyphen, move apostrophe in "girl's" 	
in full on 'getting ready 	in full-on 'getting ready 	Hyphen 	
preferable something involving actual magic 	preferably something involving actual magic 	Typo 	
her second born son 	her second-born son 	Hyphen 	
until further notice. * Wibble-wobble* 	until further notice. *Wibble-wobble* 	Remove space 	
Lily re-entered the living room 	Lily reentered the living room 	Should be one word 	
that lady Potter was 	that Lady Potter was 	Captailize 	
Or was Harry form 	Or was Harry's form 	Typo 	
your best friend who, up until 	your best friend whom, up until 	Not sure 	
"Damn Goblins!" 	"Damn goblins!" 	Lowercase 	
Bloody House Elf nearly caught me 	Bloody house elf nearly caught me 	Lowercase 	
give her time to breath 	give her time to breathe 	Typo 	
after Ginny looking beyond murderous and was currently	after Ginny, looking beyond murderous, and was currently 	Commas? 	
the worse person to ask 	the worst person to ask 	Typo 	
Lily's ears picked up 	Lily's ears pricked up 	Not sure 	
"Wizard's Chess?" 	"Wizard's chess?" 	Not sure 	
an almost overwhelming rush 	an almost-overwhelming rush 	Hyphen 	
given him the go ahead 	given him the go-ahead 	Hyphen 	
imagine Tim in Arithmancy 	imagine Tim in arithmancy 	Lowercase 	
"Or Runes." 	"Or runes." 	Lowercase 	
whom he gave a curt nod 	to whom he gave a curt nod 	Alternatively, "gave a curt nod to" 	
Pansy's hand-grip became 	Pansy's handgrip became 	Should be one word 	
they should practice on a spider 	they should practise on a spider 	Verb form 	
heavy, heavy looking chain 	heavy, heavy-looking chain 	Not sure, since "heavy" is repeated 	
the dementor bone foci 	the dementor bone focus 	Singular form 	
The beast stood stock still 	The beast stood stock-still 	Hyphen 	
inferi 	inferius 	Check all occurrences 	
a half dozen heads 	a half-dozen heads 	Hyphen 	
an eleven year old girl 	an eleven-year-old girl 	Hyphens 	
never missing a foot step 	never missing a footstep 	Should be one word 	
In the end, Filius, Filtch, Sprout 	In the end, Filius, Filch, Sprout 	Typo 	
who she used to idolise 	whom she used to idolise 	Typo 	
Miss Lovegood. "They're still somewhere 	Miss Lovegood. They're still somewhere 	Remove extraneous quote 	
full of spider webs 	full of spiderwebs 	Should be one word 	
the almost overpowering urge 	the almost-overpowering urge 	Hyphen 	
piecing it right through the thorax 	piercing it right through the thorax 	Typo 	
trail of dead acromantula 	trail of dead acromantulas 	Plural 	
"Greetings school teacher," 	"Greetings schoolteacher," 	Should be one word 	
and the ever popular, "AAAIIIIIII!" 	and the ever-popular, "AAAIIIIIII!" 	Hyphen 	
a dog sized acromantula 	a dog-sized acromantula 	Hyphen 	
three Slytherins off it's back 	three Slytherins off its back 	Remove apostrophe 	
landed in-between him 	landed in between him 	Remove hyphen 	
Sectumsempra! " 	Sectumsempra!" 	Remove space 	
extremely mushy bits . 	extremely mushy bits. 	Remove space before period 	
no large matter to re-tell 	no large matter to retell 	Should be one word 	
the thrum of it's magic 	the thrum of its magic 	Remove apostrophe 	
dozen or so dead acromantula 	dozen or so dead acromantulas 	Plural 	
"That was Draco's work was it?" 	"That was Draco's work, was it?" 	Comma? 	
"No it was definitely loud." 	"No, it was definitely loud." 	Comma? 	
from practicing 'his' new 	from practising 'his' new 	Verb form 	
version of the Serpensortia 	version of serpensortia 	Remove "the" and lowercase? 	
between the acromantula 	between the acromantulas 	Plural 	
a path in a cliff-face 	a path in a cliff face 	Remove hyphen 	
the better to illuminate 	to better illuminate 	Reword 	
The passage way soon opened 	The passageway soon opened 	Should be one word 	
older than colonisation of the new world 	older than the colonisation of the new world 	Missing word 	
a secret parseltongue only cave 	a secret parseltongue-only cave 	Hyphen 	
any kind of old norse 	any kind of Old Norse 	Captailize 	
the court of feathered serpent 	the court of the feathered serpent 	Not sure 	
$Open$ 	§Open§ 	 	
Her head of house glared at her. 	The potions master/DADA professor/... 	Not her head of house as that position is taken by the Baron at this point.	
== Chapter 44 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
"Happy Birthday, Hermione!" 	"Happy birthday, Hermione!" 	Lowercase 	
The Great hall was packed 	The great hall was packed 	Lowercase 	
Intention gifts 	Intent gifts 	Typo 	
peas and mashed potato 	peas and mashed potatoes 	Plural 	
Hermione's smile faulted 	Hermione's smile faltered 	Typo 	
only had History of Magic 	only had history of magic 	Lowercase 	
leather bound book 	leather-bound book 	Hyphen 	
require the pensive 	require the pensieve 	Typo 	
Wizards and Witches waved 	Wizards and witches waved 	Lowercase 	
Platform Nine and Three Quarters 	Platform Nine and Three-Quarters 	Hyphen 	
— The way he sat all hunched up 	— the way he sat all hunched up 	Lowercase 	
a half dozen young witches 	a half-dozen young witches 	Hyphen 	
Last timeline Hermione still had 	Last-timeline Hermione still had 	Hyphen for consistency	
the trolly arrived 	the trolley arrived 	Typo 	
bought an arm-full 	bought an armful 	Typo 	
well-practiced, elegant step 	well-practised, elegant step 	Verb form 	
many dark leaning purebloods 	many Dark-leaning purebloods 	Capitalize and hyphen 	
his supposed basilisk summoning ability	his supposed basilisk-summoning ability 	Hyphen 	
an unheard of achievement 	an unheard-of achievement 	Hyphen 	
the usual Wizarding crowd 	the usual wizarding crowd 	Lowercase 	
in the Lovegood's garden 	in the Lovegoods' garden 	Move apostrophe 	
charcoal grey robes 	charcoal-grey robes 	Hyphen 	
"Thank you, Sir," 	"Thank you, sir," 	Lowercase 	
Quidditch, Duelling, Homework, and 	Quidditch, duelling, homework, and 	Lowercase 	
to the-boy-who-lived 	to the boy-who-lived 	Remove hyphen 	
obviously book shaped packages 	obviously book-shaped packages 	Hyphen 	
a pristine flower-bed 	a pristine flower bed 	Remove hyphen 	
dry-stone wall/dry stone wall 	drystone wall 	Should be one word 	
his better placed little helpers 	his better-placed little helpers 	Hyphen 	
an eagle feather quill 	an eagle-feather quill 	Hyphen 	
the still stunned gnome 	the still-stunned gnome 	Hyphen 	
the bow-truckles fed 	the bowtruckles fed 	Should be one word 	
an amazing under-secretary 	an amazing undersecretary 	Should be one word 	
speaking of under-secretaries 	speaking of undersecretaries 	Should be one word 	
wearing salmon pink robes 	wearing salmon-pink robes 	Hyphen 	
Department of Law Enforcement 	Department of Magical Law Enforcement 	Missing word 	
the Minister is nominated 	the minister is nominated 	Lowercase 	
nominated by, and serves the Wizengamot	nominated by, and serves, the Wizengamot	Comma? 	
the statue of secrecy 	the statute of secrecy 	Typo 	
no these writings had been encrypted 	no, these writings had been encrypted 	Comma 	
a powerful muggle repelling charm 	a powerful muggle-repelling charm 	Hyphen 	
the first year girl 	the first-year girl 	Hyphen 	
two-dozen 	two dozen 	Multiple occurrences 	
In the ministry of magic 	In the Ministry of Magic 	Capitalize 	
one-hundred percent 	one hundred percent 	Remove hyphen 	
the Gray's co-operation 	the Gray's cooperation 	Should be one word 	
by better co-ordinating 	by better coordinating 	Should be one word 	
In theory, yes, but the Minister 	In theory, yes, but the minister 	Lowercase 	
Interest in law-making 	Interest in lawmaking 	Should be one word 	
Up in visitor's gallery 	Up in visitors' gallery 	Move apostrophe 	
law compelling Noble Houses 	law compelling noble houses 	Lowercase 	
discrete though they are 	discreet though they are 	Typo 	
the first year Gryffindor dormitory, 	the first-year Gryffindor dormitory, 	Hyphen 	
help me, James. " 	help me, James." 	Remove space 	
"Damnit!" 	"Dammit!" or "Damn it!" 	Typo 	
being offered him 	being offered to him 	Missing word 	
Better that then you having 	Better that than you having 	Typo 	
the almost completed Slytherin Manor 	the almost-completed Slytherin Manor 	Hyphen 	
his house-elf, Plato 	his house elf, Plato 	Remove hyphen 	
was busy drip feeding 	was busy drip-feeding 	Hyphen 	
going to have acquire 	going to have to acquire 	Missing word 	
== Chapter 45 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
her mistresses' secret diary 	her mistress' secret diary 	Singular 	
the now dead house 	the now-dead house 	Hyphen 	
Five-hundred years 	Five hundred years 	Remove hyphen 	
her now chronic magical exhaustion 	her now-chronic magical exhaustion 	Hyphen 	
a well-thought out move 	a well-thought-out move 	Hyphen 	
two almost invisible figures 	two almost-invisible figures 	Hyphen 	
a few-dozen lords can appreciate. 	a few dozen lords can appreciate." 	Remove hyphen and add closing quote	
the first year muggleborns 	the first-year muggleborns 	Hyphen 	
The brunette twins, Violet and Marigold Chesterfield were partnered	The brunette twins, Violet and Marigold Chesterfield, were partnered	Comma 	
the plain looking one 	the plain-looking one 	Hyphen 	
We could become Vassals 	We could become vassals 	Lowercase 	
to co-ordinate the different departments 	to coordinate the different departments 	Should be one word 	
… And of course 	…And of course 	Remove space 	
his emerald green eyes 	his emerald-green eyes 	Hyphen 	
single well placed killing curse 	single well-placed killing curse 	Hyphen 	
Slug-club style 	Slug-club-style 	Hyphen 	
the Slytherin girl's dormitory 	the Slytherin girls' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
that Morgana damned hair 	that Morgana-damned hair 	Hyphen 	
naturally-perfect, silky-smooth hair 	naturally perfect, silky-smooth hair 	Remove hyphen with -ly adverbs 	
in-between an encyclopaedia 	in between an encyclopaedia 	Remove hyphen 	
'cracking substitution cyphers with frequency analysis.' 	Cracking Substitution Cyphers with Frequency Analysis. 	Remove quotes and capitalize 	
to out-match the difference 	to outmatch the difference 	Should be one word 	
the Hufflepuff first-years 	the Hufflepuff first years 	Remove hyphen 	
no pure-blood princess 	no pureblood princess 	Should be one word 	
that Wizards who want more 	that wizards who want more 	Lowercase 	
half-way between her 	halfway between her 	Should be one word 	
the now livid Virgo 	the now-livid Virgo 	Hyphen 	
red-headed 	redheaded 	Multiple occurrences 	
the Acromantula show 	the acromantula show 	Lowercase 	
instantly re-focused 	instantly refocused 	Should be one word 	
short, sharp gasps."I can't." 	short, sharp gasps. "I can't." 	Space 	
a substitution cipher 	a substitution cypher 	British spelling 	
brute forcing 	brute-forcing 	Multiple occurrences 	
more careful in future 	more careful in the future 	Missing word 	
hand deliver a letter 	hand-deliver a letter 	Hyphen 	
the day to day matters 	the day-to-day matters 	Hyphens 	
a chimera should actually 	a chimaera should actually 	Typo 	
Total Darkness 	Total darkness 	Lowercase 	
You're interested in muggleborns aren't you? 	You're interested in muggleborns, aren't you? 	Comma? 	
theDark Lord 	the Dark Lord 	Space 	
understand one-another better 	understand one another better 	Remove hyphen 	
deal with a Chimera 	deal with a chimaera 	Lowercase and typo 	
"Please, professor," 	"Please, Professor," 	Capitalize title 	
a password protected document 	a password-protected document 	Hyphen 	
watched the students practice 	watched the students practise 	Verb form 	
his mostly-eaten beef wellington 	his mostly eaten beef wellington 	Remove hyphen for -ly adverbs 	
the now empty glass 	the now-empty glass 	Hyphen 	
meeting room, was once again 	meeting room was once again 	Remove comma? 	
silver snakes head cane 	silver snake's head cane 	Apostrophe 	
== Chapter 46 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
quick mind and focused spirit serves 	quick mind and focused spirit serve 	 	
Dirt and muck was being forcibly 	Dirt and muck were being forcibly 	 	
since he did, in-fact, want 	since he did, in fact, want 	Remove hyphen 	
he-who-must-not-be-named 	He-Who-Must-Not-Be-Named 	Multiple occurrences 	
succeed in re-filling 	succeed in refilling 	Should be one word 	
stood on beach 	stood on the beach 	Missing word 	
has stuck the seas 	has struck the seas 	Not sure 	
through the veil 	through the Veil 	Capitalize 	
diary where captain Slytherin 	diary where Captain Slytherin 	Capitalize 	
Ramessees II with 162 	Ramesses II with 162 	Typo 	
an almost teenage girl 	an almost-teenage girl 	Hyphen 	
Virgo said, out-loud. 	Virgo said, out loud. 	Remove hyphen 	
on a coatrack 	on a coat rack 	Should be two words 	
the Heir of the Noble House 	the heir of the Noble House 	Lowercase 	
"Fine!" The Lestrange Heir spat 	"Fine!" the Lestrange heir spat 	Lowercase 	
was caught flat footed 	was caught flat-footed 	Hyphen 	
let of a shriek 	let out/off a shriek 	Typo 	
They are, effectively a country 	They are effectively a country 	Remove comma (or add another comma after "effectively")	
Witch-co 	WitchCo 	Change all occurrences for consistency 	
more gold then we know what to do wit 	more gold than we know what to do wit 	Typo 	
in air to air combat 	in air-to-air combat 	Hyphens 	
It's not a Phoenix 	It's not a phoenix 	Lowercase 	
professor McGonagall said 	Professor McGonagall said 	Capitalize 	
to practice the charm 	to practise the charm 	Verb form 	
her parent's new home 	her parents' new home 	Move apostrophe 	
a family sized broomstick 	a family-sized broomstick 	Hyphen 	
Just crawl into your positions!" 	"Just crawl into your positions!" 	Add opening quote 	
"Oh, Thank Merlin!" 	"Oh, thank Merlin!" 	Lowercase 	
the ministry of magic 	the Ministry of Magic 	Capitalize 	
hall of prophecies 	Hall of Prophecies 	Not sure. Multiple occurrences 	
a brunette and a red-head 	a brunette and a redhead 	Should be one word 	
you're a life saver 	you're a lifesaver 	Should be one word 	
duck-taped submarine van 	duct-taped submarine van 	Typo 	
Slytherin's sunken long boat 	Slytherin's sunken longboat 	Should be one word 	
muggle style periscope 	muggle-style periscope 	Hyphen 	
to experience first-hand 	to experience firsthand 	Should be one word 	
teeth-brushing, hair styling, and make-up charms.	teeth-brushing, hair-styling, and makeup charms.	Hyphen, and "makeup" is one word 	
breathing in the fresh-air 	breathing in the fresh air 	Remove hyphen 	
on the chess board 	on the chessboard 	Should be one word 	
a copy of file 	a copy of the file 	Missing word 	
muggle-born 	muggleborn 	Should be one word 	
along-side Daphne, Luna 	alongside Daphne, Luna 	Should be one word 	
I practice a lot 	I practise a lot 	Verb form 	
the rather disorientated house-elf 	the rather disorientated house elf 	Remove hyphen 	
the sub in-front of Harry 	the sub in front of Harry 	Remove hyphen 	
not in anyway large 	not in any way large 	Should be two words 	
might as well be re-named 	might as well be renamed 	Should be one word 	
the minster's personal office 	the minister's personal office 	Typo 	
they chose not too 	they chose not to 	Typo 	
buying all their debt 	buying all their debts 	Plural 	
Hermione argued. It's our base 	Hermione argued. "It's our base 	Add opening quote 	
see the chief Auror 	see the chief auror 	Lowercase 	
finally showed in to the Chief Auror's office 	finally shown into the chief auror's office 	Two typos, and lowercase 	
assassinate the minister?" 	assassinate the minister? 	Remove extraneous quote 	
"if I may, there are 	"If I may, there are 	Capitalize 	
"Yes, Thank you." 	"Yes, thank you." 	Lowercase 	
to be strip searched 	to be strip-searched 	Hyphen 	
maybe twenty meters long 	maybe twenty metres long 	Typo 	
from the parchment work 	from the parchment-work 	For consistency 	
an all-mighty pull 	an almighty pull 	Typo 	
"I'm — Fine." She gasped out. 	"I'm — fine," she gasped out. 	Lowercase and comma 	
for Lords of the Wizengamot 	for lords of the Wizengamot 	Lowercase 	
the noble house of Hawking 	the Noble House of Hawking 	Capitalize 	
the usual ministry plastered decor 	the usual ministry-plastered decor 	Hyphen 	
Miss Coopers past 	Miss Cooper's past 	Apostrophe 	
an innocent person with a prison 	an innocent person in a prison 	Typo 	
by happiness sucking demons 	by happiness-sucking demons 	Hyphen 	
"But, but.." Mister Bentley tried 	"But, but…" Mister Bentley tried 	Change two periods to ellipses 	
Mrs Bun's formally beautiful garden 	Mrs Bun's formerly beautiful garden 	Typo 	
like the living-room of 	like the living room of 	Remove hyphen 	
The Aurors had not stripped her 	The aurors had not stripped her 	Lowercase 	
that custom's point 	that customs point 	Remove apostrophe 	
sip of fire-whisky 	sip of firewhisky 	Should be one word 	
another three-hundred years 	another three hundred years 	Remove hyphen 	
== Chapter 47 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
boy who lived 	boy-who-lived 	Multiple occurrences 	
Weasley Twins 	Weasley twins 	Multiple occurrences 	
the Gryffindor Common Room 	the Gryffindor common room 	Lowercase 	
In the Headmaster's office 	In the headmaster's office 	Lowercase 	
fewer merlin-damned meetings 	fewer Merlin-damned meetings 	Capitalize 	
Yes, headmaster 	Yes, Headmaster 	Capitalize 	
Their set up looked 	Their setup looked 	Noun form 	
No, headmaster 	No, Headmaster 	Capitalize 	
the grand staircase. "Okay," he said	the grand staircase. [newline]"Okay," he said	Different person speaking	
a case by case basis 	a case-by-case basis 	Hyphens 	
no-one ever came here 	no one ever came here 	Remove hyphen 	
a muggle repelling ward 	a muggle-repelling ward 	Hyphen 	
the second year boys 	the second-year boys 	Hyphen 	
I can't have the boy-who-lived kill 	I can't have the Boy-Who-Lived kill 	Capitalize 	
House of Smith carefully placed 	House of Smith, carefully placed 	Comma 	
one-by-one the students 	one by one the students 	Remove hyphens 	
"Magical Jewellery," the girl said. 	"Magical jewellery," the girl said. 	Lowercase 	
in the table line up 	in the table lineup 	Noun form 	
You need licenses 	You need licences 	Noun form 	
from the boy's father 	from the boys' father 	Move apostrophe 	
under the boy's noses 	under the boys' noses 	Move apostrophe 	
the still frozen students 	the still-frozen students 	Hyphen 	
Boys and Girls 	Boys and girls 	Lowercase 	
their quidditch team-mates 	their quidditch teammates 	Should be one word 	
== Chapter 48 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
"Sicking your aunt on them 	"Siccing your aunt on them 	 	
to practice flying 	to practise flying 	Verb form 	
her first ever view 	her first-ever view 	Hyphen 	
the Castel Sant'angelo 	the Castel Sant'Angelo 	Capitalize 	
The eye-ball zipped off 	The eyeball zipped off 	Should be one word 	
She chucked the ice-cube 	She chucked the ice cube 	Remove hyphen 	
of official looking seals 	of official-looking seals 	Hyphen 	
No-one's could 	No one's could 	Remove hyphen 	
an all-mighty HOOT 	an almighty HOOT 	Typo 	
purple cursing 	purple-cursing 	Multiple occurences 	
knowledgable 	knowledgeable 	Multiple occurrences 	
a former Horcrux 	a former horcrux 	Lowercase 	
how that would effect 	how that would affect 	Typo 	
the late night incident 	the late-night incident 	Hyphen 	
knife in the draw 	knife in the drawer 	Typo 	
to the boys dormitory 	to the boys' dormitory 	Apostrophe 	
Double Defence Against the Dark Arts 	Double defence against the dark arts 	Lowercase 	
anyone else's' business 	anyone else's business 	Remove apostrophe 	
intention gift 	intent gift 	Multiple occurences 	
why they they'd not let them 	why they'd not let them 	Remove "they" 	
the daily prophet open 	the Daily Prophet open 	Capitalize 	
with wide-eyes 	with wide eyes 	Remove hyphen 	
Sometime after mid-night 	Sometime after midnight 	Should be one word 	
the idyllic country-side 	the idyllic countryside 	Should be one word 	
you-know-who 	You-Know-Who 	Multiple occurences 	
come from New-Zealand 	come from New Zealand 	Remove hyphen 	
Ron was wide eyed now 	Ron was wide-eyed now 	Hyphen 	
the chamber 	the Chamber 	Multiple occurrences 	
Slytheriness 	Slytherinness 	Not sure 	
muggle-born 	muggleborn 	Should be one word 	
from what he'd gleamed 	from what he'd gleaned 	Typo 	
his Slytherin year-mates 	his Slytherin year mates 	For consistency 	
the red-headed witch 	the redheaded witch 	Should be one word 	
into the great-hall 	into the great hall 	Remove hyphen 	
and headmaster Lockhart stood up 	and Headmaster Lockhart stood up 	Capitalize 	
"Boys and Girls!" 	"Boys and girls!" 	Lowercase 	
the Hufflepuff Heiress 	the Hufflepuff heiress 	Lowercase 	
controlling Potter after-all 	controlling Potter after all 	Remove hyphen 	
the Bones Heiress 	the Bones heiress 	Lowercase 	
Boy-Who-Lived 	boy-who-lived 	Multiple occurences 	
a well-practiced smile 	a well-practised smile 	Verb form 	
given the first-years 	given the first years 	Remove hyphen 	
for a second-year 	for a second year 	Remove hyphen 	
possibly sixth-years 	possibly sixth years 	Remove hyphen 	
the maybe fourth-year girl 	the maybe-fourth-year girl 	Hyphen? 	
as a first-year 	as a first year 	Remove hyphen 	
a muggleborn only thing 	a muggleborn-only thing 	Hyphen 	
our skincare potion 	our skin-care potion 	Hyphen 	
at the Duelling Club 	at the duelling club 	Lowercase 	
The masked-mule passed by 	The masked mule passed by 	Remove hyphen 	
"I'm going too—" 	"I'm going to—" 	Typo 	
moved onto giving them 	moved on to giving them 	Should be two words 	
the blonde ponce 	the blond ponce 	Typo 	
But all-in-all 	But all in all 	Remove hyphens 	
the plain looking muggleborn 	the plain-looking muggleborn 	Hyphen 	
his now sopping clothes 	his now-sopping clothes 	Hyphen 	
a super advanced third-year spell 	a super-advanced third-year spell 	Hyphen 	
been studying witch weekly 	been studying Witch Weekly 	Capitalize 	
the richest Houses 	the richest houses 	Lowercase 	
The Great Blood Feud, 	"The Great Blood Feud, 	Add opening quote 	
before taking a sip. " 	before taking a sip. 	Remove extraneous quote	
to two of purest purebloods 	to two of the purest purebloods 	Missing word 	
against sleeping drafts 	against sleeping draughts 	Typo 	
A tied up Granger 	A tied-up Granger 	Hyphen 	
he slammed face first 	he slammed face-first 	Hyphen 	
"Always have back up for your back up?"	"Always have backup for your backup?"	Should be one word 	
I'm no good at this. 	I'm no good at this." 	Add closing quote