Editing 10

== Chapter 49 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
, which made building repport more likely. 	, which made building rapport more likely. 	 	
—The witch quickly hopped out of the shadow 	—The witch quickly hopped out of the shower 	 	
supposed to one-hundred per cent on herside. 	supposed to be one-hundred per cent on her side. 	2 mistakes 	
A dozen low-voices 	A dozen low voices 	Remove hyphen 	
inspected the new-comer 	inspected the newcomer 	Should be one word 	
stared at her with stony-eyes 	stared at her with stony eyes 	Remove hyphen 	
one of the bar stools 	one of the barstools 	Should be one word 	
on the bar-counter 	on the bar counter 	Remove hyphen 	
the lightning bolt pendant 	the lightning-bolt pendant 	Hyphen 	
chummy with men who's breath 	chummy with men whose breath 	Typo 	
backside of a cow-shed 	backside of a cowshed 	Should be one word 	
one-hundred 	one hundred 	Multiple occurrences 	
per cent 	percent 	Multiple occurrences 	
reflect poorly on your House 	reflect poorly on your house 	Lowercase 	
in-between his mother's lines 	in between his mother's lines 	Remove hyphen 	
Their first class was Charms 	Their first class was charms 	Lowercase 	
common-room 	common room 	Multiple occurrences 	
Defence Against the Dark Arts Classroom 	defence against the dark arts classroom 	Multiple occurrences 	
Gryffindor first-years 	Gryffindor first years 	Remove hyphen 	
all over the school by Lunch 	all over the school by lunch 	Lowercase 	
the Headmaster likes to drop in 	the headmaster likes to drop in 	Lowercase 	
Lockhart wants the Defence position 	Lockhart wants the defence position 	Lowercase 	
his Mother's letter 	his mother's letter 	Lowercase 	
a packed class-room 	a packed classroom 	Should be one word 	
appear for Potions 	appear for potions 	Lowercase 	
shown for History of Magic 	shown for history of magic 	Lowercase 	
Draco had double Herbology 	Draco had double herbology 	Lowercase 	
They were potting teenage mandrake 	They were potting teenage mandrakes 	Plural 	
their fluffy ear-muffs 	their fluffy earmuffs 	Should be one word 	
never-the-less been dreading 	nevertheless been dreading 	Should be one word 	
orders from your Father 	orders from your father 	Lowercase 	
chamber / chamber of secrets 	Chamber / Chamber of Secrets 	Multiple occurrences 	
a glass-work grandfather clock 	a glasswork grandfather clock 	Should be one word 	
overlooking the grand-staircase 	overlooking the grand staircase 	Remove hyphen 	
The parsel-tongue only secret passageway 	The parseltongue-only secret passageway 	Fix hyphens 	
snake that had bit him 	snake that had bitten him 	Typo 	
the other out-loud 	the other out loud 	Remove hyphen 	
animated snake locks was already open 	animated snake locks, was already open 	Comma 	
an almost sentient-like being 	an almost-sentient-like being 	Hyphen 	
I could still speak Parseltongue 	I could still speak parseltongue 	Lowercase 	
there's noway Alex 	there's no way Alex 	Should be two words 	
"I disagree, healer Pomfrey." 	"I disagree, Healer Pomfrey." 	Capitalize 	
the unconscious Dark Tween 	the unconscious dark tween 	Lowercase 	
over the Hogwarts Quidditch Pitch 	over the Hogwarts quidditch pitch 	Lowercase 	
in Slytherin Green robes 	in Slytherin-green robes 	Hyphen (if slytherin describes the color) and lowercase	
snatched it in free-fall 	snatched it in free fall 	Remove hyphen 	
That break-away was pathetic! My grand-mother could	That breakaway was pathetic! My grandmother could	Should be one word 	
even better co-ordinated 	even better coordinated 	Should be one word 	
a mid-air dive-roll 	a midair dive-roll 	Should be one word 	
as safe as between Horcruxes 	as safe as between horcruxes 	Lowercase 	
that the Guardian is something 	that the guardian is something 	Lowercase 	
Luna appeared to think it 	Luna appeared to think about it 	Missing word 	
the chasm is… inadvisable."
"Unadvisable is one way	the chasm is… inadvisable."
"Inadvisable is one way	Change one of the two so they match 	
towards the horcruxes defences 	towards the horcrux's defences 	Apostrophe 	
into a sledge hammer 	into a sledgehammer 	Should be one word 	
an all-mighty smash 	an almighty smash 	Typo 	
in front of her started to change 	in front of her, started to change 	Comma 	
deals in Mandrake 	deals in mandrake 	Lowercase 	
blonde hair, blue-eyes 	blonde hair, blue eyes 	Remove hyphen 	
made her way to the mind scape 	made her way to the mindscape 	Should be one word 	
In the mean time 	In the meantime 	Should be one word 	
extremely somber faces 	extremely sombre faces 	British spelling 	
fifty-foot long tail 	fifty-foot-long tail 	Hyphen 	
successfully blind-folded again 	successfully blindfolded again 	Should be one word 	
The Potter Heir shook himself 	The Potter heir shook himself 	Lowercase 	
in a dirty tea-cloth 	in a dirty tea cloth 	Remove hyphen 	
*you are weak!* Another thought thought back 	*you are weak!* another thought thought back 	Lowercase 	
*not again!* Thought the first voice 	*not again!* thought the first voice 	Lowercase 	
*No!* The black ooze screamed back 	*No!* the black ooze screamed back 	Lowercase 	
panic filling its voice 	panic filling its voice. 	Periood 	
the still churning stomach 	the still-churning stomach 	Hyphen 	
scarlet red scales 	scarlet-red scales 	Hyphen 	
three or four meters 	three or four metres 	Typo 	
well thought out gamble 	well-thought-out gamble 	Hyphens 	
her now shaking hands 	her now-shaking hands 	Hyphen 	
"$Only one king!$" 	"§Only one king!§" 	 	
$LET ME OUT OF HERE!$ 	§LET ME OUT OF HERE!§ 	 	
== Chapter 50 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
robes and crest popped into being 	robes and crest, popped into being 	Comma 	
CONTINUITY ERROR 	"Penguins," Ginny said, now grinning widely. "Rock-hopper penguins. Fred said he'd go first. George will go with the next batch.
IN CHAPTER 57
George is first	 	
the Granger's underground workshop	the Grangers' underground workshop 	Move apostrophe 	
a well put-together lady 	a well-put-together lady 	Hyphen 	
perfect her make-up 	perfect her makeup 	Should be one word 	
smashed glass laying around 	smashed glass lying around 	Typo 	
her blood adopted daughter 	her blood-adopted daughter 	Hyphen 	
Hocrux 	horcrux 	Multiple occurrences 	
or was that super villain 	or was that supervillain 	Should be one word 	
to your first class.' 	to your first class." 	Change to double quote 	
chirped professor Flitwick 	chirped Professor Flitwick 	Capitalize 	
saying the incantation and yo-yoed	saying the incantation, and yo-yoed	Comma 	
his usual light-hearted tone 	his usual lighthearted tone 	Should be one word 	
her now empty plates 	her now-empty plates 	Hyphen 	
to afternoon class — Defence 	to afternoon class — defence 	Lowercase 	
Glaring, Creevy? 	Glaring, Creevey? 	Typo 	
one of whom, was the 	one of whom was the 	Remove comma 	
the now sheepish looking girl 	the now-sheepish-looking girl 	Hyphens 	
"No, professor." 	"No, Professor." 	Capitalize 	
now until year end 	now until year-end 	Hyphen 	
all but over-whelmed them 	all but overwhelmed them 	Should be one word 	
flows of magic it was as if 	flows of magic, it was as if 	Comma? 	
the Black Heiress 	the Black heiress 	Lowercase 	
the now falling Daphne 	the now-falling Daphne 	Hyphen 	
meter 	metre 	Multiple occurrences 	
we need to continue practicing 	we need to continue practising 	Verb form 	
In the mean time 	In the meantime 	Should be one word 	
a large leather bound book 	a large leather-bound book 	Hyphen 	
an animagi's magic 	an animagus's magic 	Singular 	
a wand measuring contest 	a wand-measuring contest 	Multiple occurrences 	
a one-month old cub 	a one-month-old cub 	Hyphen 	
Basilisk 	basilisk 	Multiple occurrences 	
Chimaera 	chimaera 	Multiple occurrences 	
Chimaera are 	Chimaeras are 	Multiple occurrences 	
chimaera can have 	chimaeras can have 	Plural 	
hot and cold blooded 	hot and cold-blooded 	Hyphen 	
a boy-who-lived adventure book 	a Boy-Who-Lived adventure book 	Capitalize 	
plucked from the grape-vine 	plucked from the grapevine 	Should be one word 	
the local watering-hole 	the local watering hole 	Remove hyphen 	
Slytherin conquered the chamber 	Slytherin conquered the Chamber 	Capitalize 	
more life-like qualities 	more lifelike qualities 	Should be one word 	
Whatever the cause she needed to 	Whatever the cause, she needed to 	Comma 	
"S-susan." 	"S-Susan." 	Not sure 	
the Bones Heiress 	the Bones heiress 	Multiple occurrences 	
"My Mother," she started 	"My mother," she started 	Lowercase 	
the Lovegood Heiress 	the Lovegood heiress 	Lowercase 	
a fourth year Hufflepuff 	a fourth-year Hufflepuff 	Hyphen 	
Well, Maybe a little 	Well, maybe a little 	Lowercase 	
become stronger. More Powerful 	become stronger. More powerful 	Lowercase 	
A few days past 	A few days passed 	Typo 	
in emerald green robes 	in emerald-green robes 	Hyphen 	
along-side two-dozen other wizards	alongside two dozen other wizards 	Remove hyphens 	
a nondescript looking villa 	a nondescript-looking villa 	Hyphen 	
meeting with mister Grasso 	meeting with Mister Grasso 	Capitalize 	
coming from the fire-storm 	coming from the firestorm 	Should be one word 	
too Light 	too light 	Not sure. Multiple occurrences	
I have two Ladies 	I have two ladies 	Lowercase 	
blond 	blonde 	Multiple occurrences 	
Roared a voice. 	roared a voice. 	Lowercase 	
Oliver wood shouted 	Oliver Wood shouted 	Capitalize 	
I have to practice 	I have to practise 	Verb form 	
into the mid-air huddle 	into the midair huddle 	Should be one word 	
to the Slytherin Dungeons 	to the Slytherin dungeons 	Lowercase 	
second-year girl's dormitory 	second-year girls' dormitory 	Move apostrophe 	
== Chapter 51 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
our very own 'Boy-Who-Lived' 	our very own 'boy-who-lived' 	Not sure 	
the older year's warming charms 	the older years' warming charms 	Move apostrophe 	
Wood, Spinet, Johnson, 	Wood, Spinnet, Johnson, 	Typo 	
the Boy Who Lived 	the boy-who-lived 	Lowercase/Hyphens 	
fake-boy-who-lived 	fake boy-who-lived 	Multiple occurrences 	
every ounce of self control 	every ounce of self-control 	Hyphen 	
canon ball 	cannonball 	Multiple occurrences 	
Not bad, Blood-traitor 	Not bad, blood-traitor 	Lowercase 	
the pure-blood heir 	the pureblood heir 	Should be one word 	
house-elf 	house elf 	Multiple occurrences 	
I'll keep an eye on 	"I'll keep an eye on 	Add opening quote 	
his high pitched voice 	his high-pitched voice 	Hyphen 	
an almost lightning bolt crack 	an almost lightning-bolt crack 	Hyphen 	
Over three-hundred people 	Over three hundred people 	Remove hyphen 	
An almost manic shit-eating grin 	An almost-manic shit-eating grin 	Hyphen 	
mid-air 	midair 	Multiple occurrences 	
the other Bludger 	the other bludger 	Lowercase 	
Slytherin are still leading 	Slytherin is still leading 	Not sure 	
once-estranged childhood-friend 	once-estranged childhood friend 	Remove hyphen 	
"Yes, Headmaster, Sir!" 	"Yes, Headmaster, sir!" 	Lowercase 	
expensive Slytherin green robes 	expensive Slytherin-green robes 	Hyphen (if slytherin refers to the shade of green)	
SLYTHERIN WIN! 	SLYTHERIN WIN!" 	Add closing quote 	
professors Flitwick, McGonagall, Sinistra, and Vector	Professors Flitwick, McGonagall, Sinistra, and Vector	Capitalize 	
with madams Hooch, Pomphrey, and Pince 	with Madams Hooch, Pomfrey, and Pince 	Capitalize and spelling 	
looked at one-another 	looked at one another 	Remove hyphen 	
the Headmaster's floo 	the headmaster's floo 	Lowercase 	
and Heir John Potter, Sir 	and Heir John Potter, sir 	Lowercase 	
a rather harried looking owl 	a rather harried-looking owl 	Hyphen 	
war-hammer 	war hammer 	Multiple occurrences 	
our big stick is laying useless 	our big stick is lying useless 	Typo 	
the cultured sounding reply 	the cultured-sounding reply 	Hyphen 	
a large double-door opened 	a large double door opened 	Remove hyphen 	
I'd wager" Xeno said 	I'd wager," Xeno said 	Comma 	
from the Fullmoon Ministry 	from the Fullmoon ministry 	Lowercase 	
trapped within the fortress. 	trapped within the fortress." 	Add closing quote 	
The badly-dressed Fullmoonia border guards 	The badly dressed Fullmoonia border guards 	Remove hyphen for -ly adverbs 	
a rather nice looking cottage 	a rather nice-looking cottage 	Hyphen 	
walked past a news stand 	walked past a newsstand 	Should be one word 	
as stoney as a statue 	as stony as a statue 	Typo 	
on flag-stone floors 	on flagstone floors 	Should be one word 	
give him near perfect balance 	give him near-perfect balance 	Hyphen 	
one-hundred feet above 	one hundred feet above 	Remove hyphen 	
with full-dragon hide 	with full dragon-hide 	Move apostrophe 	
a child playing hop-scotch 	a child playing hopscotch 	Should be one word 	
regarding heir Potter 	regarding Heir Potter 	Capitalize 	
the still self-shredding material 	the still-self-shredding material 	Hyphen 	
with wide-eyes 	with wide eyes 	Remove hyphen 	
fall below the tree-line 	fall below the tree line 	Remove hyphen 	
his still remaining hand 	his still-remaining hand 	Hyphen 	
an Anglo Saxon roundhouse 	an Anglo-Saxon roundhouse 	Hyphen 	
wild looking dogs in a pile 	wild-looking dogs in a pile 	Hyphen 	
bedroom in Potter manor 	bedroom in Potter Manor 	Capitalize 	
the chamber 	the Chamber 	Capitalize 	
one-hundred per cent 	one hundred percent 	Remove hyphen, and "percent" is one word 	
a champion of death 	a champion of Death 	Capitalize 	
A near god-like being 	A near-godlike being 	Move hyphen 	
her Horcrux problem 	her horcrux problem 	Lowercase 	
now stretched taught 	now stretched taut 	Typo 	
all-together less pleasant 	altogether less pleasant 	Typo 	
In less than a few seconds she'd been 	In less than a few seconds, she'd been 	Comma 	
books from the Hogwarts Library 	books from the Hogwarts library 	Lowercase 	
== Chapter 52 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
Slytherin girl's second year dormitory	Slytherin girls' second-year dormitory	Hyphen and move apostrophe	
traditional muggle-style 	traditional muggle style 	Remove hyphen 	
last minute additions 	last-minute additions 	Multiple occurrences 	
half-a-dozen 	half a dozen 	Remove hyphens 	
in lime-green pillow cases 	in lime-green pillowcases 	Should be one word 	
a large scale project 	a large-scale project 	Hyphen 	
per cent 	percent 	Multiple occurrences 	
these more hands-on kind of projects 	these more hands-on kinds of projects 	Plural 	
winter festival 	Winter Festival 	Multiple occurrences 	
the lime-green clothed house-elves 	the lime-green-clothed house elves 	Hyphen 	
I want another stock taking 	I want another stock-taking 	Hyphen 	
the now transformed slide 	the now-transformed slide 	Hyphen 	
two-hundred 	two hundred 	Multiple occurrences 	
a crisp emerald green robe 	a crisp emerald-green robe 	Hyphen 	
rather odd shaped rooms 	rather odd-shaped rooms 	Hyphen 	
brand new magical appliances 	brand-new magical appliances 	Hyphen 	
an almost identical looking globe 	an almost-identical-looking globe 	Hyphens 	
I was skeptical when you 	I was sceptical when you 	British spelling 	
The main land mass of Gairsay 	The main landmass of Gairsay 	Should be one word 	
Practicing your sales patter 	Practising your sales patter 	Verb form 	
I must be over seeing 	I must be overseeing 	Should be one word 	
the high altitude drop test 	the high-altitude drop test 	Multiple occurrences 	
the eye-socket of a snake statue 	the eye socket of a snake statue 	Remove hyphen 	
nearly five-dozen spectators 	nearly five dozen spectators 	Remove hyphen 	
The floo in the entrance way 	The floo in the entranceway 	Should be one word 	
the double layered warding system 	the double-layered warding system 	Hyphen 	
meter 	metre 	Multiple occurrences 	
house-elf / house-elves 	house elf / house elves 	Multiple occurrences 	
== Chapter 53 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
POTENTIAL PLOTHOLE 	"I just hope Harry won't suffer long-term effects from the petrification."
Severus snorted. "I dare say your son is resilient enough to cope. He has been through plenty in his life." He gave her a meaningful look.	Snape was petrified nearly the whole school year :D	
brightly-coloured tinsel festooned 	brightly coloured tinsel festooned 	Remove hyphen for -ly adverbs 	
always warm and cozy 	always warm and cosy 	British spelling 	
"Of course, minister." 	"Of course, Minister." 	Capitalize 	
manager of Bobmin Moor 	manager of Bodmin Moor 	Typo 	
the Head of the DMLE 	the head of the DMLE 	Lowercase 	
the first-year didn't yet 	the first year didn't yet 	Remove hyphen 	
in the Ministry basement 	in the ministry basement 	Lowercase 	
a magically-binding contract 	a magically-binding contract 	Remove hyphen for -ly adverbs 	
their as-yet unborn great-great-granddaughter 	their as-yet-unborn great-great-granddaughter	Hyphen 	
an otherwise empty bit 	an otherwise-empty bit 	Hyphen 	
being the Potter Heir 	being the Potter heir 	Multiple occurrences 	
a declaration of intention gift 	a declaration of intent gift 	Multiple occurrences 	
the space expansion charm 	the space-expansion charm 	Hyphen 	
Would the broomsub count 	Would the broom-sub count 	For consistency 	
books from the Hogwarts Library 	books from the Hogwarts library 	Lowercase 	
And Alohomora doesn't open it 	And alohomora doesn't open it 	Lowercase 	
one-hundred times 	one hundred times 	Multiple occurrences 	
through the Potter library 	through the Potter Library 	Capitalize 	
secrets of house Potter 	secrets of House Potter 	Capitalize 	
Deep sea oil drilling operations 	Deep-sea oil drilling operations 	Hyphen 	
ever seen from a first-year 	ever seen from a first year 	Remove hyphen 	
dark lord 	Dark Lord 	Multiple occurrences 	
chosen ones and champions.' 	chosen ones and champions."' 	Missing end quote 	
the blood adopted heir 	the blood-adopted heir 	Hyphen 	
a side-ways glance 	a sideways glance 	Should be one word 	
passing through the veil 	passing through the Veil 	Capitalize 	
the other soul pieces 	the other sssoul pieces 	Consistensy with the rest of the lamia speech 	
in front of the other hand 	in front of him. On the other hand 	Missing words 	
her now larger chest 	her now-larger chest 	Hyphen 	
it actually makes an odd kind of sense 	It actually makes an odd kind of sense 	Capitalize 	
In Virgo's lamia speech, the use of "sss" is inconsistent	Starts at "Lamia animagusss, actually," 	For consistency 	
== Chapter 54 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
Plothole 	Susan (100%) and Harry's girls learning about Potter family secret. Although showing the ring might not be the same as revealing, when it was out all the time?	 	
behind the upstairs banisters 	behind the upstairs bannisters 	British spelling 	
all the elves were laying unconscious	all the elves were lying unconscious 	Typo 	
the Malfoy's spy 	the Malfoys' spy 	Move apostrophe 	
Three hundred-years-old 	Three hundred years old 	Remove hyphens 	
the latest broomsub prototype 	the latest broom-sub prototype 	For consistency with earlier chapters	
oven-door slamming house elves 	oven-door-slamming house elves 	Hyphen 	
Harry is gone! _! We is being SORRY! 	Based on an earlier minor update, this is supposed to be >_< 	Not sure 	
Being Headmaster... 	Being headmaster... 	Lowercase 	
were like the difference 	was like the difference 	Typo 	
magically-enforced contracts 	magically enforced contracts 	Remove hyphen for -ly adverbs 	
It took Draco a split-second 	It took Draco a split second 	Remove hyphen 	
still in mid-air 	still in midair 	Should be one word 	
during Defence Against the Dark Arts 	during defence against the dark arts 	Lowercase 	
going to go full Dark Lord 	going to go full dark lord 	Lowercase 	
== Chapter 55 ==
Wrong 	Corrected 	Reasoning 	Status
PLOTHOLE 	Lily or James not coming back for John. Explain out of John's view why he thinks they won't come back as fast. Why is he so calm.
# Blocked of floo to go to Slytherin Manor
# No instant messaging system in the wizarding world, ignoring Patroni
# They didn't notice John wasn't there, and travelling by floo home takes half an hour. Long enough for the ritual to happen	 	
I'm sorry, Lord Slytherin," 	"I'm sorry, Lord Slytherin," 	 	
While Lord Slytherin bid his farewell	While Lord Slytherin bade his farewell	The past tense of bid farewell is bade farewell. 	
The title of lord of lords was as old	The title of Lord of Lords was as old 	Since it refers to the title and not the person. 	
was as old as the Albion itself. 	was as old as Albion itself. 	We don't believe it refers to a group of things, thus the the might be out of place. Unless it refers towards the plural magics	
the four-dozen doxies 	the four dozen doxies 	Remove hyphen 	
granted to the House of Granger 	granted to the house of Granger 	Lowercase 	
snake's-head cane 	snake's head cane OR snake-head cane 	Remove hyphen or apostrophe 	
Three-dozen fairies flittered 	Three dozen fairies flittered 	Remove hyphen