Newsgroup: it.cultura.linguistica.inglese
Titolo: presentation letter

Good morning to everybody!
I'm a PhD student. Next future I'll have to find a job.
Is there someone who could help me to correct my presentation letter, please
one help!
I thank those people who will want to help me!
Bye
Serg
letter:
Dear Sir,
I'm writing to you because I'm strongly motivated to challenge my academic
preparation in an environment that allows to express with appointment,
abilities to come to objective of professional and personal growth.
 XXX ( i.e.STMicroeletronics), (world) European leader in the XXX (i.e.
plastic subjects) sector, for me is indeed synonymous of seriousness and
prestige.
For this reason   _I hope to be able to lead a period of formation on the
job at your firm_(OR I hope to be able to verify the practical
application......)_, in order to verify the practical application of the
technical and theoretical notions acquired in my formative run, having
therefore the opportunity to get to know a business organizational context,
and experience a true working activity.
I am 29 years old, I have graduated in Physics with 108/110, I'm attending a
Physics Ph.D. at  University and have a great passion for everything
regarding recycling and the study of plastic subjects for industrial ends.
I really believe that respect towards both the others and ourselves is
fundamental in life.
I'm a spontaneous sincere reflexive man who devotes his whole attention and
the necessary seriousness to his own job, for the attainment of the preset
objectives, also supported by a great remarkable enthusiasm.
Good report and organizational abilities are recognized in
me, and initially I'd like to work  in harmony group in the research field
but I'll hope surely for roles of greater responsibility in breast to the
firm.
I'm looking forward to your kind reply.
I'll attach my curriculum vitae and I shall be glad to provide any further
information.
Thank you so much for your consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Serg


  I am looking forward to your kind reply.
 I am attaching my curriculum vitae and I shall be glad to provide any 
further
 information if you require
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Senza offesa ma secondo me è troppo "Italian style". Prima di tutto evita le 
forme contratte (I'm, I'll, ecc...) poi usa "Yours faithfully" invece di 
"Yours sincerely" se scrivi ad un generico "sir". "Yours sincerely" si usa 
quando metti il nome del personaggio a cui stai scrivendo la lettera. Poi... 
boh! ci sono un bel po' di cosette strane, ad esempio "and initially I'd 
like to work  in harmony group" ("harmony group" mi ispira da gruppo di 
lettura dei romanzi rosa oppure da azienda new age), o anche "I'm a 
spontaneous sincere reflexive man" (a parte che spontaneo e riflessivo 
secondo me sono in contrasto fra loro, ma il "reflexive" che hai usato tu è 
relativo ai verbi, cioè "reflexive verbs", mentre una persona "thinking 
quietly" è "reflective").
Io ti consiglio di cercare in rete qualche esempio di "formal letter" prima 
di inviare la tua lettera di presentazione.
Ciao e buona fortuna,
Michele

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I am not sure how things are in Europe, but by American standards it's
too long and there is too much irrelevant information, like that
108/110, for example.  Here, you would never include your grades in a
cover letter (although you can probably state that you graduated magna
cum laude, summa cum laude, etc).  I agree with the person who said it
sounds "Italian".  But then again, in Europe cover letters are perhaps
longer and more detailed than they are here.  Here people don't have
time to read dozens of cover letters that are several paragraphs each.
Congratulations on your degree!
bye
ari

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 Spero che non ti senta offeso , ma nella tua lettera ci sono tanti errori 
quanti farei  io se tentassi di scriverla in italiano ! Per esempio , non 
capisco affatto cosa vuol dire ' to work in harmony group' . Ci sarebbe piu 
facile aiutarti se ci dessi anche une versione italiana della lettera !
Mike (from England)

 
ciao amico inglese

 ciao amico inglese
Thanks for the help .
Mike

 meglio: cosa voglia dire 'to work...
Già che ci siamo anche 'più' e non 'piu'!  :-)
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I'm a Dream!!!
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"prendila vitella, perchè vacca diventa comunque" (da icling) 

 
Così ho scritto pure io, leggi bene.
ciao

 Cosě ho scritto pure io, leggi bene.
Ah, non era 'non quanti...'?
Probabilmente mi ha confuso quello strano quoting per cui la risposta era 
consecutiva al pezzo *over*quotato...
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I'm a Dream!!!
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"prendila vitella, perchč vacca diventa comunque" (da icling) 

 I have made some changes to your text but wait to someone more expert
You can wait *for* someone, or you can even wait *on* someone, but I doubt
you can wait *to* someone.
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