質問: 英文を添削していただきたいです。添削お願いします。採点基準の... ■考えている内容や答え 英文を添削していただきたいです。 ■特に不安な点や、確認したいこと 添削お願いします。採点基準の写真もつけさせていただきました。
回答: 大まかに採点すると、内容2点。構成3点。語彙2点、文法1点。第1段落 問題なし。第2段落 reasonsに相当する英文の意味が正直、何を書いているのかわかりません。 こちらの思い込みで訂正します。 first, some jobs like caring old people or young children need a lot of workers. even unemployed people can apply for these jobs. but these jobs are not easy enough to start with for unskilled workers. the government should take positive attitudes, introduce these jobs to unemployed people and provide the job training for them. then even unemployed people can adapt themselves to these jobs. second, the government should provide mental care for unemployed people. many companies need workers, but some of them force people to work overtime. workers tend to lose mental health. the government should stop these companies from imposing too much overwork on people. then people will be motivated to work hard. in conclusion, the government should organize some committees which discuss these problems seriously.