質問: 自由英作文の添削お願いします。 2度目の投稿です。前回も大変お世話になりました。今回も添削よろしくお願いします<(_ _)> 問)あなたが母校の校長先生になれるとしたら、何をしたいですか?その理由とともに80語以上の英語で書きなさい if i became a plincipal of my school,i would like to introduce a volunteer activity. in particular,i want to have students call at a home for the aged.there are some reasons for this.first of all,i'd like to get students to learn what they can't study in class.by visiting a day care center,they can learn how to get on with elderly persons,and come by knowledge from old persons. second, now that japan is an aging society.above all,students needs to learn welfare,so this plan will become chances they are interested in well-being. 文法、語彙ミス等の指摘、内容に関するアドバイス等ありましたらよろしくお願いします<(_ _)>
回答: がんばってよく書けていると思います。 とりあえず、ミススペル、、、 plincipal -> principal students needs -> students need 母校は「my old school」の方が明確になります periodの後には必ず、ワンスペースを入れる習慣を。 添削できませんので、参考になるかどうか分かりませんが、下記を読んでみてください。 if i would become a principal of my old school, what i would introduce first is a volunteer activity by my student to the aged people at the nearby day-care facility. by doing so, they would have a good chance to learn what they can't experience in classroom from the elderly people. in view of the current nuclear family they rarely talk with the aged. further, this would give my students valuable opportunity to think about the aging society they would soon see and social welfare in general.