質問: 英作文の添削をお願いします。大学受験 添削お願いいたします。 英語が苦手なので、文法のミス・表現の仕方など教えていただけると嬉しいです。 設問: 以下の問いに100~150語で例や理由を添えて答えなさい。 if you could travel anywhere, where would you like to go? 解答: if i could travel anywhere, i would go to okinawa. when i was high school, i could not go to school trip for okinawa. although, i had been looking forward to going to the trip. i brought many books myself in order to know beautiful spots in okinawa and to get nice items for my family. however, i had been sick before i went to there. it was three days ago. so, i could not see beautiful sea and buy presents for my family. moreover, i have no memories of this trip. therefore, i want to enjoy taking a trip in okinawa. if i could travel in okinawa, i could make a lot of memories with my friends.(116)
回答: if i could travel anywhere, i would like to go to okinawa with my friends. when i was in high school, i couldn't go to a school trip to okinawa. since i looked forward to the trip so much, i took many books with me to make plans to see beautiful spots in okinawa and get something nice for my family. however, i had been sick for three days right before i left for okinawa. after my flights, i got sick from a cold again, so i couldn't go out to see any beautiful seas and buy some presents for my family in okinawa. therefore, i have no memory of the trip to okinawa even though most of my friends talk a lot about the trip, saying that they want to visit okinawa again. this makes me want to enjoy taking a trip in okinawa. if i could travel in okinawa, i could make a lot of memory with my friends. こんな感じですかね。文法ミスはそれほど無いですが、あまり自然で読みやすい文章ではなかったですね。それと、全体を通して意味が分からないところがあったので、勝手に文章を追加して意味が通るようにしました。この私が訂正した文章と自分のを見比べて、また質問があるようなら書き込んでみてください。なるべく答えようと思っています。