質問: 大学受験英作文のおかしな点の指摘お願いします! ***** topic:japan is not a democratic society. ***** i'm against the statement.japan is no doubt a democratic society.certainly,in those days people in japan couldn't speak ill of their government.if they publish news papers,which contain articles against the government,those who did this would be punished for their "dangerous behavior." in addition,people couldn't go on a trip freely.very few people had rights to vote for a election because most people couldn't aford to pay enough taxes. in contrast to that,however,you can go anywhere,even to the other countries such as china,brazil,and even south africa.japanese citizens reached twenty years old have rights to vote,and can even run for elections of members of the diet. it is wonderful that you can enjoy democrasism without special efforts and we should say thank you to it. 宜しくお願いします!
回答: あと、些細な点ですがnewspaper(s)とwhichの間にコンマはなくてもいいと思います。