質問: 英語の添削をしてください。 空想上の話ですが、英作文をしてみたので間違いや、 より良い語彙などがあったらアドバイスお願いします。 it has been about 14 years now since i belonged to the group of aboridinal people in australia. at present, i am 35 years old. looking back, i had specialized in ethnology at university, because i was very interested in ethnological art. i decided to broaden my outlook on life by traveling abroad, when i was 20 years old. australia where i focused on was my first place for my investigation. there was an area called ‘aboridinal land’ where general people can’t interfere without permission but fortunately i could go there. i could communicate with aboridinal people and gradually, they regarded me as their family. at the time, i wouldn’t go back to japan, so i naturally accepted their words as i originally came from here. now, i had forgot japanese and i’m sure that i’m not japanese any more. that’s my whole life so far, but i believe that i could find what i really wanted to do and how to enjoy the life.
回答: cielayuさんの英語は実に立派で、直すところはほとんどないのですが、いくつか気がついたところを書いてみます。あくまで参考意見だとご理解下さい。 > aboridinal → aboriginal > at present, i am 35 years old. → at present は少し変かも知れません。i'm now 35 years old. はいかがでしょう。 > australia where i focused on was my first place for my investigation. → where を which に。on という前置詞がありますから。 > ‘aboridinal land’ where general people can’t interfere without permission ... → where を which に。interfere を enter に。interfere の意味がはっきりしないので。「許可なく入れない」ということかと思います。 > fortunately i could go there ... → i was able to enter it. または、i was allowed to enter it. > i could communicate with aboridinal people ... → i was able to communicate ... または、i got to communicate ... 。could は仮定を表す用法があり、前後にもよりますが、意味が曖昧になますから、避けた方が良いと思います。 > regarded me as their family → regarded me as a member of their family ひとりで 'family' にはなれませんので。 > i naturally accepted their words as i originally came from here. → これは意味がはっきりしません。彼らが「私はもともとこの土地の出身だ」と言ったということでしょうか。as は that の方が良いかもしれません。また、came from より belonged to の方がわかりやすいかも知れません。 > now, i had forgot japanese ... → i have forgotten japanese ... 「今」の話ですから。 > i could find ... → i found ... やはり、could は避けた方が良いかと。 以上、ご参考まで。