first edit complete

1) Made some grammar edits. 
2) Paragraph 12 (line 23), removed the word "literally" - b/c she wasn't literally being eaten by her feelings - so you might want to replace "eating her up," as that now reads like a slightly inappropriate attempt at humor. Suggestions: tormenting her? wearing her down? 
3) Some parts are a little clunky - try reading aloud to see if you can make it smoother.
4) Replaced "foster itself" in line 73 with "develop" - not sure if that's the meaning you're getting at, so change again if needed.
5) Line 77, where you say "society has warped perfection throughout the ages" - sounds awkward, reword?