Edits on draft

Here are my edits. In summary - from the results onwards it's great with very few edits. Still some issues with the introduction but probably easy enough to fix now. I think the methods still need to be explained more clearly, that's where the most work will be and I sort of got lost in the permutations so my edits may be nonsensical! More diagrams would help.

If you want to discuss any of this I'll be around tomorrow and next week. Definitely getting there though! I reckon do this for the thesis chapter next, send that to me for edits, then take those edits and apply  to the paper. Then I reckon one more go over the paper and we can submit.