That could work, but I'm not sure it's *vastly* better.  I need to go do some reading on session tickets in general; I have a pretty good idea of the general fundamentals of TLS negotiation, but that paragraph doesn't help me understand what handshake steps are skipped (and, importantly, why it's safe to skip those handshake steps).

There's probably some value in doing a full pass on it, reading both from the perspective of 1) an end user ("this makes your session vulnerable to your ISP" (MITM); "this makes your session vulnerable to the NSA" (sniffing); "this makes your session slower"), and 2) a technical reader experienced in cryptographic basics, but not specifics of TLS (describing in a little more detail what steps happen when, and what specific attack vectors are).