Section 4: You don't typically find specific deadlines in a long-term policy. As soon as the deadline passes it becomes moot. And using a specific address is also not suggested. What if it changes two years from publishing? There are reasons why it could. Better to not specify that level of detail in a policy. 

Section 3 is redundant. The very policy itself would require us to develop some kind of standard to publish open data (which we are anyway regardless of a policy). That's what "open by default" would mean. Again this is getting more into the "action" (tactics) of executing the policy. This should just be about the policy. Let us develop the strategic and action plans for keeping in line with the policy. If not, you can potentially pose limits you might not see up front. 

Policy, strategy, tactics should all remain separate.