Batch QC eps6-10

ep6
2332* edited to fit ep7

ep7
0213* edited to fit ep8
0232*  more common usage
0525* more common/standard usage
0600* goes without comma usually
0746* just feels like it needs an article, they're talking about a very
specific set of signatures
0945* "Er" --> "Um"
1457 word choice?
1802* object pronoun required here
2330 edited to fit ep8
2333* edited to fit ep8

ep8
0425* sounds a bit nicer, no
1024* usually without comma
1239* phoneme stuttering
1532* agreeing with script comment person here
2330* edited to fit ep9
2330* edited to fit ep9
2333 NOT edited to fit ep9 (spirit flame line) because it the line was
shortened in the preview
2333* edited to fit ep9 (going to surface line)
2335* edited to fit ep9
2337* eptitle in preview edited to fit ep9
2337* edited to fit ep9

ep9
0001*  edited to fit ep1
0006* edited to fit ep1, edited for more consistent tone
0009* edited for more consistent tone, joined
0013* edited for tone
0036* Ooshi --> Ohshi because it's short for the Oshiohshi, just as
Shishio is short for Shioshishio two lines prior
0058* phoneme stuttering
1045* comma added
1433* preposition overkill
1732* shortened, was in dire need of shortening
2330* edited to fit ep10
2332* edited to fit ep10
2334* edited to fit ep10
2336* edited to fit ep10
2338* edited to fit ep10
CR script tends to put commas before "too"; not gonna bother with
changing them though, not that important

ep10
0237* comma splice
0257*  common usage: two words (or hyphenated) for noun, one word for
adjective
0548* killed comma b/c whole phrase is a single exclamation; slightly
edited for tone (always feels weird to me to use "god" in idioms/random
phrases when the story is about real gods)
0635* slightly changed syntax (reason: sentence adverb "soon" feels like
it should be set off with a comma in the sentence-initial position, but
that looks clunky IMHO)
0955* number of verb adjusted to agree with subject
1107* bit more descriptive and accurate now
1156* edited so we don't have two lines back to back starting with "if",
plus it kinda didn't make sense at all in the original line
1258* come on, "distributing", she's like 10yo
1318* edited b/c unsightly generitranslation
1333* comma separating phrases that go together; don't put comma between
a conjunction and the phrase it's associated with; went for a different
line anyway
1437* killed explicit relative pronoun so the now implicit pronoun can
include the "someone" previously excluded by "that"
1608* conditional backshift overkill
2150* edited because no no no no way the past tense works in english;
joined because the extra information in the next line would have made it
way too long; might warrant a second look, though