It sounds like I'm off track with the point of this item.  That's fine, and I'll take another crack at it tomorrow.  If anyone else would like to, that would also be a welcome fresh take on things.

I have two main concerns with the original.  I think the points raised by rrix are only addressed by "you're only really here when you're here in spirit too".  Everything else borders on tautological.  That's a ratio of 42 fluff words to 10 important ones.  It's confusing, and I don't understand.  If I don't understand, how would a newcomer feel?

My second concern: of those 52 words, 2 of them are a form of "participate" and 3 of them are a form of "contribute", which are, in this sense, synonymous.  10% of the words in this item mean the same thing, and yet nowhere is it defined what those words actually mean to us.  Also, repeating relatively uncommon words (yes, "participate" and "contribute" count as relatively uncommon) is generally considered bad practice.