First edit: Comments and copy edits to essay
Second draft with edits and some old paragraphs pending deletion.
Removed editor comments, deleted old paragraphs, proof read. awaiting another edit
Trimmed some excess verbiage; swapped some stuff; corrected typos (very quick edit)
First revision of transfer-students-only essay
Third draft of all applicants essay.
Copy edits
Rewrote opening for a stronger opening. Rewrote start of paragraph that comment remarked "I was not prepared to do stuff I did not like...". Corrected changed some suggested wordings.
Changes made in discussion 20/11
Adding recommended paragraph between "Independently I have used..." and "During City College's 2013..."
Changes to 2 paras after the new para for consistency
Grammer changes
Further grammatical corrections