# Talk:Sultanate of Dahlak

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 16:03, 23 March 2018 (UTC)


### Criteria
### Review
Well-written:

Verifiable with no original research:

Broad in its coverage:

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

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#### Result
#### Discussion
References.

Please add ISBN numbers.
Move van Donzel et al one down, to put the list in alphabetic order.
Footnotes 4, 8, 12, 13, 14 don't link to their citations.
Prose

"The Muslims of Dahlak were probably not overly successful in proselytizing what now constitutes Eritrea, since Christianity was still too established." This doesn't, IMO, really work as a sentence. What is "still" trying to communicate? And it doesn't seem to me to actually give a reason for the failure of proselytization.
@Gog the Mild: Fixed the references as proposed. I also tried to rephrase your quoted sentence a bit. What I want to say is that the local church was already centuries old at the time of the arrival of the Muslims, hindering easy proselytization. Historically, Islam didn't start to spread in Eritrea until the 15th/16th century, though right now I lack a concrete source I can quote that from. Will eventually include that in the article later. LeGabrie (talk) 19:20, 23 March 2018 (UTC) 
Fixed broken footnotes. LeGabrie (talk) 19:20, 23 March 2018 (UTC)

LeGabrie Based on what you wrote above I have had a go myself at a form of words re proselytization. If you don't like it, don't hesitate to revert. This is GA anyway. Nice work. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:23, 23 March 2018 (UTC)
User:Gog the Mild I will probably change it as soon as I have a valid source concerning the start of mass Islamization in Eritrea. Thanks again for your time. Time to get a featured article ready next. LeGabrie (talk) 21:37, 23 March 2018 (UTC)


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