# Talk:Television Romance

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll look at this tomorrow when I am more awake! — GhostRiver 05:01, 26 October 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lede
Mention the actual release date in the first sentence, not just the year
Commas rather than em dashes in the first paragraph
"which was written by"
First sentence of the second paragraph is incongruent with the body; the double A-side release was in November
"whereas" → "while" (whereas implies a differing opinion)
"#83" → "number 83"
"#2" → "number 2"
These are all done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:23, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Composition and production
mention that Doran and Baron-Gracie are from the band Pale Waves
Ambient Light should be italicized
"ironically, some listeners assume the song is a love song" → "some listeners incorrectly assume that "Television Romance" is a love song"
Link Matthtew Healy up here in the second paragraph
"after his manager, Jamie Oborne (who also managed Pale Waves), played Healy" → "after Jamie Oborne, who managed both the 1975 and Pale Waves, played him"
Remove the parentheticals in the third paragraph and just make that a new sentence
Some MOS:LQ issues throughout; punctuation like commas and periods should always be on the outside unless you're quoting a complete sentence
Minus the MOS:LQ issues, these are all done as well.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:23, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Music video
Should ideally be after the "Release" section since the video came out later
Delink Matty Healy, should be linked above
"co-directed by Matty Healy (making this his directorial debut) and Samuel Burgess-Johnson" → "co-directed by Samuel Burgess-Johnson and Matty Healy, with the latter making his directorial debut."
""She had no clue what was going on but she was loving it,"" → ""She had no clue what was going on but she was loving it"," per MOS:LQ
The YouTube views seem somewhat trivial unless it broke a record
"nominated for an NME Award for Best Video at the NME Awards 2018" → "nominated for Best Video at the 2018 NME Awards"
Comma after "on 14 February"
Alternative Press also reviewed the video here
These should be done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:34, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Release
A better source than Amazon should be used for the release date; try this from DIY
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:24, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Reception
Upon its release
"critics" → "music critics", and link to Music journalism
Comma after "writing for NME"
""a shimmering, summer-tinged indie banger."" → ""a shimmering, summer-tinged indie banger"." per MOS:LQ
""the song's heavenly chorus,"" → ""the song's heavenly chorus"," per MOS:LQ
""allows the Manchester quartet to elevate into a league of their own."" → ""allows the Manchester quartet to elevate into a league of their own"." per MOS:LQ
No comma after "Clash writer Robin Murray"
""a sugar-sweet ear-worm of a track."" → ""a sugar-sweet ear-worm of a track"." per MOS:LQ
What makes The VPME a reliable source?
More MOS:LQ stuff all through this section
"for sounding very similar to" → "for its similarities to"
"Some critics" are mentioned, but then only one is referenced
Minus the MOS:LQ issues, these are all done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:35, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Addendum
The year-end lists and awards and nominations should be in prose, since the former only has three and the latter has one. See something like "Uncomfortable"
Additionally, there should be a section called "Commercial performance" that talks about chart history; this is in addition to, not instead of, the charts below
Done. And since there wasn't a lot to talk about with regard to the single charting, I just added a blurb to the "Release" section.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:39, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Track listing
Incomplete - no credits given in the parameters, no citations, and no total runtime
How is it now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:34, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Charts
Table should have a title/caption per MOS:TABLECAPTION
Added.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:24, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### Release history
Table should have a title/caption per MOS:TABLECAPTION
There should be citations for both of these releases
"DL" should link to music download, and LP to gramophone record
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:28, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### References
Gig Goer should be the work parameter, not publisher
Other issues with reliability of sources outlined above
Fixed.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:28, 29 October 2021 (UTC)


### General comments
Images are either Creative Commons or are fair use, and all are relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig score looks good
Article is missing a Personnel section with music and production credits
Added personnel section.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:30, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished. — GhostRiver 19:26, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: How do these changes look to you?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 14:44, 29 October 2021 (UTC)
Much better! I've fixed a number of small issues that came up, and now I think that this one is ready to go! — GhostRiver 01:21, 31 October 2021 (UTC)