# Talk:The Pinball of the Dead

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 04:30, 1 January 2017 (UTC)
I will be picking up the review of this article.  MPJ-DK  04:30, 1 January 2017 (UTC)

External links
The tool checks out okay on all external links so that's in order Y
Copyright violation tool

Seem to be okay, it hit on quotes etc. but nothing to worry about Y
General review
I don't like seeing GAs with just one lead paragraph, I think we should always strive towards the best possible lead and this just feels short
I expanded the lead a bit more. GamerPro64 00:58, 4 January 2017 (UTC)
Related - honestly the article seems short too, I read through it and then sat there and was like "is that it"? The reception part is longer than the Gameplay and Development section combined, that imbalance is problematic for me, makes it more about what people thought of the game than the actual game itself.
Can't find much information on the development of the game. But I did expand the Gameplay section more, separating it in two sections. GamerPro64 18:52, 5 January 2017 (UTC)
The quote by Kasavin needs a direct source listed with it
Didn't notice I missed the sourcing. done. GamerPro64 04:22, 3 January 2017 (UTC)
More to come  MPJ-DK  01:55, 3 January 2017 (UTC)
I have been going over your changes. It does help the balance a bit. I will continue my review now.  MPJ-DK  23:12, 7 January 2017 (UTC)
Images
The two non-free images looks to have appropriate tags and explanations, there really are no "free" versions available and the free image of the Gameboy is appropriate too - No issues.  MPJ-DK  23:14, 7 January 2017 (UTC)
General review
"Full motion" should be "full-motion"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"increasing the games difficulty" should be "increasing the game's difficulty"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
In at least one of the articles I read about how many pinball tables were featured in the game, gave it names etc. I think that'd be good information to include under "Gameplay".
It's already in the article. "The game has three tables based on locations from The House of the Dead and The House of the Dead 2: Wondering, Movement, and Cemetery." GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
D'oh you're right not sure why I missed that.  MPJ-DK  00:18, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"on June 18, 2002 and later on July 4, 2002 in Japan." should be "on June 18, 2002, and later on July 4, 2002, in Japan."
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"spoke positive" sounds better if it's "spoke positively"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"the games animation" should be "the game's animation"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"compared the game favorable" should be "compared the game favorably"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"It received Editor's Choice from GameZone." seems like a fragment, how about rewriting it to "The game was selected as the "Editor's Choice" by GameZone"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"called the games graphics" should be "called the game's graphics"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"The sound and music to the game was" should be "The sound and music to the game were"
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
"mixed-bag" is not hyphenated.
done. GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
I am not sure what's missing from this sentence "was made engaging and more things to do in it" but it does not real correctly.
Changed it to " was made engaging and there were more things to do in it." GamerPro64 00:04, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
Short, but if some details around the tables etc. I think it's okay lenght wise and just need to address a few gramatical issues.  MPJ-DK  23:24, 7 January 2017 (UTC)
Alright we're there, I am going to pass this one. Congrats GamerPro64  MPJ-DK  00:48, 8 January 2017 (UTC)