# Talk:Todd Packer (The Office)

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 13:44, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
I'll be glad to take this one. As last time, I'll start with a close readthrough of the article's text, noting intial issues, and follow with a checklist. -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:44, 5 January 2013 (UTC)


### Initial readthrough
"although Kevin pretends to go along with it" -- "it" is a pronoun without a referent here. Maybe just say, "pretends to play along" or "pretends to enjoy the jokes"?
" to be fine with" -- a bit informal. Perhaps, "a trade to which Erin seems to agree" or "a trade which does not appear to bother Erin"?
"The cold open in the episode ... " -- what was the cold open for this episode? It's not clear from the plot above, so maybe just add a phrase describing it here.
"Notable cut scenes" -- I'm removing "notable" here as a tiny bit of editorializing. Since "include" makes it clear this isn't a complete list, it's not really needed.
Since these are very minor points, I'll go straight to the checklist. 


### Checklist
Thank you ever so much for the review! How do the changes look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk)  18:47, 5 January 2013 (UTC)

Looks great--thanks for your super-speedy response! -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:05, 5 January 2013 (UTC)