# Talk:Time Traveler (roller coaster)

Does anyone have any data on what ride restraints will be used in the final version?  I think that that information is sorely lacking in this article.  While I can see the appeal of not having an over-the-shoulder restraint due to the fact that your head will be whipped in all sorts of directions (and you don't want to bang your ears on them), I also think that *any* coaster's restraint system should be designed to handle the absolute worst case scenario.  In this case, it would be getting stuck on the ride in an upside-down element (due to a wheel locking or something else).  I just don't see how a lap-only restraint can be enough for all passenger body shapes in a situation like that.  Another example of a worst case scenario is when an excessively heavy person gets on a ride that shouldn't be on it and the kid operating the ride doesn't say no.  Granted, I've ridden on Flight of Fear (at Kings Dominion) before *and* after the shoulder restraints were removed and the ride is a better experience without the over-the-shoulder restraints, but I wasn't thinking about what-ifs and safety that day.  I was ASSUMING the designers had done their due diligence.  That doesn't mean they had.  On another note, is there an article in existence at Wikipedia that talks about engineering coasters for safety in general?  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 174.194.0.52 (talk) 20:00, 2 January 2018 (UTC) 

This review is transcluded from Talk:Time Traveler (roller coaster)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 16:53, 13 March 2019 (UTC)

Lead
"Manufactured by Mack Rides, the ride was done in collaboration with the park becoming" - recommend rewriting to "Manufactured by Mack Rides, the ride, which was done in collaboration with the park, became..."
"and was the 18th best-steel roller coaster." - all-time? « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:12, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 Done reworded. Adog (Talk・Cont) 22:20, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
History
"The original idea and planning for a new attraction, the latter being Time Traveler, lasted over four years." - recommend rewriting to "The original idea and planning for a new attraction—which would become the Time Traveler—lasted over four years."
"In January 2016 while a prototype" - need comma after "2016"
"plan the rides concept with Mack" - should be "ride's"
" but not certifying to what it would be" - remove "to"
"The ride was announced to be manufactured by Mack Rides at the cost of $26 million to design and build." - remove "announced to be", assuming that the announcement became true and Mack did Design/Build it.
"In February 2018, the ride was presumed to open coinciding with the parks seasonal operations in March 2018, which was confirmed thereafter when Silver Dollar City announced that the ride would open with the park." - since it's already opened, seems like it would read better if you just said that it opened in March 2018 to coincide with park's seasonal operations. Note that it needs to be "park's", not "parks"
"concerns from the companies members and board of directors" - "companies" should be "company's". « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:35, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
 Done reworded, better paraphrasing for point 6 since later it specifically mentions the opening date. Adog (Talk・Cont) 16:30, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
Ride experience
"went onto create the time traveling device" - "onto" should be "on to"
"similarly with their previous attraction built Outlaw Run honoring law enforcement through its story." - recommend "similar to their previous attraction Outlaw Run, which honored law enforcement through its story."
"and head upwards into a left banked turn" - change to "heads upward"
"One cycle of the ride takes about 1 minute and 57 seconds." - I would either say "about two minutes" or remove about. 1:57 is pretty exact. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:24, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 Done reworded. Adog (Talk・Cont) 22:20, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
Characteristics
"Time Traveler doesn't have a lift hill" - avoid contraction
"Each car vehicle of the a train are brass-colored" - just car? Vehicle seems repetitive. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  20:56, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 Done reworded. Adog (Talk・Cont) 22:20, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
Ride mechanics
"Each of the trains have a eddy current brake" - change "a" to "an"
"situated under the rides vehicles" - "rides" should be "ride's" since it's possessive. Also, maybe change to "coaster's" or something else, as ride sounds ambiguous.
"When the rides metallic disc" - see previous comment.
"to adjust the rotation of the ride vehicles" - see previous comments.
"the rides vehicles as they're stationary" - see previous comments. Also, avoid contractions.
"on-ride decorated LED's on" - recommend using the more generic "lights" instead of LEDs. Also, note that it should be "LEDs", not "LED's"
"the vehicles to the operators control systems" - change "operators" to "operator's" since it's possessive.
"near the vehicles wheels to release" - change "vehicles" to "vehicle's" since it's possessive.
Note that you use various terms like "ride", "vehicle", "train" etc to describe the coaster. It may read clearer if you use just one generic term. I will let you decide. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  18:54, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 Done upon further review, removed any instances of "vehicle" and reduced the wording of "ride" in paragraphs. Simply using "car's" (referring to the individual sections of the train) and "train's" (as the vehicle as a whole). Adog (Talk・Cont) 00:04, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
Records
Not sure I understand the purpose of the phrase ", taking the place of Gekion Live Coaster located at Tokyo Joypolis that has one inversion." If the roller coaster became the first with 3 inversions, then there is to need to reference a coaster hat only has 1. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  18:54, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 Possibly I saw what you meant and I attempted to re-word it to make it sound more proper as per its source, RCDB, as being a first for the roller coaster design to attempt so-and-so rather than a record. Let me know if that fits or to omit entirely. Adog (Talk・Cont) 00:56, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
Reception
"Time Traveler was received well among its critics and guests" - "well received" sounds better to me.
"Moreover, expressing that it did distinguish itself from other roller coasters because of its "mild spinning", launches, and smoothness." - Maybe say something like "He also felt" instead of "Moreover, expressing" which doesn't come across very well.
"Further remarking that a back-seat ride would be more worth than a front-seat ride because of the clear views of the landscape." - similar to previous comment. Clarify who is talking. i.e. "He also remarked"
"Additionally commenting that the ride, although shorter in length and time from other roller coasters, made up through its pacing and elements." - similar to previous two comments. Clarify who is talking. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  20:30, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
 Done reworded. Adog (Talk・Cont) 00:56, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
Images
File:SDC Time Traveler Entrance.jpeg - non-free image, claimed fair use. Low resolution on the description page should be "Yes" (currently "No"). The "Replaceable" description should be changed to state something like "Logos cannot have free replacements."
 Done with proper supporting material. Adog (Talk・Cont) 18:22, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
File:TimeTraveler SDC Track.jpeg - image needs to have an author and date added to the description page. Otherwise looks good.
 Done in credit to User:McDoobAU93. Adog (Talk・Cont) 18:22, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
File:Time Traveler Car (38390303886).jpg - looks good.
File:Eddy current brake diagram.svg - looks good. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  16:53, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
References
No issues, looks good. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:41, 15 March 2019 (UTC)
Comments
I will review this. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  16:53, 13 March 2019 (UTC)

In advance, thank you for another review. Adog (Talk・Cont) 18:22, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
Adog No problem. I'm done for today most likely, will come back and finish it up tomorrow. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:33, 13 March 2019 (UTC)
I will await further review, all input very helpful and will continue to make tweaks. :D Adog (Talk・Cont) 00:56, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
Just need to do the references now. Will finish those up tomorrow and then should b good to go. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:07, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
Gonzo fan2007 Sounds good! Adog (Talk・Cont) 21:45, 14 March 2019 (UTC)
Nice work Adog. All comments addressed, so this is a pass. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:41, 15 March 2019 (UTC)
Thank you very much Gonzo fan2007 for another review! Adog (Talk・Cont) 16:13, 15 March 2019 (UTC)
 Small note, I'm not sure if you did the review coinciding with the roller coaster's debut, but it was a good-timed homage either way. :D  Adog (Talk・Cont) 16:16, 15 March 2019 (UTC)

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