# Talk:Vince Dunn

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:58, 27 May 2020 (UTC)
Will be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 16:58, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Lead
Delink Canadian per MOS:OVERLINK
Wikilink Peterborough Petes on the first mention in the lead
Link scouts to Scout (sport) for those unfamiliar with the term


### Youth
Wikilink Peterborough Petes and minor hockey to the correct entries on their first mention in the prose
"to allow him to be eligible to play with the Petes." - I think the words in bold are unneeded
Wikilink Barrie to the relevant article
Wikilink points to the appropriate article


### Major junior
"Dunn led all first year defencemen in the league in scoring with 33 points in 63 games." - Hockeys Future does not mention Dunn scored 33 points. Please find another to go along with Hockeys Future to verify that the information is correct
"totaling 56 points in 68 games" - not mentioned by the Niagara IceDogs source attached to it. Please use another source that explicitly states this fact
"where he remained pointless in the 6-0 loss to Team Orr." - please use an en dash in place of the hyphen
"He also earned a final ranking of 32 overall" - 32nd
"to help the team win the series 4-2." - en dash please


### Professional
"Approaching his second season as a pro," - professional
"He consistently played on the teams" - team's
"by once again cracking the Blues lineup to begin the 2018–19 season." - use another formal word instead of cracking
Wikilink cross-checked for those unfamiliar with ice hockey terminology
"Dunn recorded a new career high in 'points" - how many points?
Wikilink Alex Pietrangelo and Colton Parayko
"St. Louis' first Stanley Cup in their 52-year franchise history." - mykawartha.com doesn't mention it was St. Louis' first Stanley Cup win in its 52-year history but Peterborough Examiner. I suggest citation bundling
"During the pause in play due to COVID-19," - due to the COVID-19 pandemic,
"Dunn competed in a league wide" - league-wide
Wikilink Fortnite


### References
It should be made consistent on whether it should be "The Peterborough Examiner" or "Peterborough Examiner"
Reference 13 title: ""2014-15 Team Awards" - en dash please
Reference 14 is missing the author
Reference 22 should mention that The Canadian Press is the agency that provided the story
Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 18:12, 27 May 2020 (UTC)

MWright96, thanks for the quick review. I believe I have addressed all of your issues. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 20:44, 27 May 2020 (UTC)
@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Now promoting to GA class. I've wikilinked two players who have articles. MWright96 (talk) 06:38, 28 May 2020 (UTC)
MWright96, my apologies. I was sure I Wikilinked them but my wifi was cutting in and out and often times I had to refresh. Thanks for the review once again. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 09:17, 28 May 2020 (UTC)