# Talk:Out Loud (song)

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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 08:01, 5 July 2019 (UTC)

Last few reviews have taken a while to get proper responses to for reasons that you can see if you look on the discussions. I will get to doing this one today, hoping there's not similar issues. --Kyle Peake (talk) 08:01, 5 July 2019 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Add 2017 as the recorded year as the first section mentions how work began in July
"independently released on September 6, 2017 as her debut single." → "independently released for digital download on September 6, 2017 as her debut single."
"The lyrics of "Out Loud"," → "The lyrics of the track,"
"been described as emotive, discussing on themes" → "been described as emotive. They discuss on the themes"
"They are inspired" → "They were inspired"
"was received with mixed reviews" → "was met with mixed reviews"
"critics who argued over its quality" → "critics, who argued over the track's quality"
"was released onto Hanna's" → "was uploaded to Hanna's"
"October 18, 2017, featuring her" → "October 18, 2017. The visual features her"
Remove ref 1 from the lead as that is described in the body
Record chart should be targeted instead of record charts
"number 47 in Scotland" → "number 47 on the Scottish Singles Chart"
"among others." → "among others in 2017." as you should list the year it charted in
"the singer performed "Out Loud" live" → "the singer performed it live"
This should remain as readers may be confused by what is meant with the "it" since the preceding few lines delve on the charts.


### Background and composition
"It was written by" → "The song was written by"
"YouTube channel in which" → "YouTube channel, during which"
"In a Billboard" → "In an interview with Billboard"
"and are inspired by" → "and were inspired by"
Not sure if the "one-off promotion" info belongs in the comp para, maybe the background para or promotion section?
I think is works here since the book is mentioned for the first time here because of the lyrics inspiration.


### Reception
"was received with mixed reviews" → "was met with mixed reviews"
"likened it" → "likened the song"
I literally say "song" the line before. This works in my opinion.
"well, that's kind of the point."[1]" → "well, that's kind of the point".[1]"
"It further peaked at number 47 in Scotland" → "It further peaked at number 47 on the Scottish Singles Chart"
"appeared on download charts in the United Kingdom and Canada" → "appeared at numbers 90 and 39 on download charts in the United Kingdom and Canada"
"as well as on the Hitseekers chart" → "as well as at number six on the Hitseekers chart"


### Promotion
Put the music video info first and retitle Music video and promotion
"was uploaded onto" → "was uploaded to"
"that of Maya Rudolph" → "that of American actress Maya Rudolph"
"as the video cuts" → "as the visual cuts" the video uses are too close to each other
"in which she" → "in which the singer"


### Track listing
Good


### Charts
Good


### Release history
Territory → Country
Add a ref column
WikiLink Independent


### References
Archive all of these
The tool still doesn't work (at least for me).
Cite multiple iTunes stores for ref 2 to verify it was various
WikiLink ref 14 to Australian Recording Industry Association


### Final thoughts and verdict
 On hold for now, fix the issues within a week. Kyle Peake (talk) 10:40, 5 July 2019 (UTC)

@Kyle Peake: Hi and thank you very much for your review. I've solved all your comments apart from where noted. Greetings; Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:43, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Looks good, will gladly  Pass this! --Kyle Peake (talk) 19:47, 6 July 2019 (UTC)