# Talk:Starweb

I'm not sure how to add it, so I'll leave that to someone who does, but if you go to their webpage http://www.flyingbuffalo.com/ about 10-11 paragraphs down, you'll find Rick's own words... Our most popular play by mail game is the award-winning Starweb. --Walts0042 (talk) 18:20, 4 April 2008 (UTC)

It's hidden behind a login, but the entire nature of Pyramid magazine changed a while back and those old articles are no longer reachable. Hcobb (talk) 22:05, 3 March 2011 (UTC)

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Starweb/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Lead feels a bit bulky for such a modest article, I would suggest trimming a bit to get down to two large paras.
Trimmed to two paragraphs.
"In early years, this amount usually ranged from 1,000 to 10,000 points" without knowing how often and how many points are awarded, this is relatively meaningless.
I added some material about point values accumulated in gameplay to provide perspective on this.
"reviewer Timothy B. Brown" perhaps "reviewer and game designer"?
Agreed. Done.
"by Flying Buffalo in" in the lead vs "Flying Buffalo Inc." in the infobox.
Fair enough. Their own website uses both styles, but a GA should be consistent. Done.
"game, Nuclear Destruction, in" not notable enough for a link?
Wikilinked in the lead.
"field in "roughly" 1976" couldn't this just be "field in around 1976"?
That works. Done.
"Professional game moderation" wouldn't that have been human-moderated?  Shouldn't that be mentioned/linked here rather than later on?
I don't think we can make that leap here. Rick Loomis says in this history of Flying Buffalo that he started with human moderation but he had a program made for Nuclear Destruction soon after its start. It's not clear how quickly he transitioned from human-moderated to computer moderated. Either method could have been professional game moderation (done by the company). [Added clarification: since he started Nuclear Destruction in 1970 and started the "Professional game moderation" in 1971, he may have made the switch to computer-moderation at the same time or before.]
"the play-by-mail field" PBM.
Done.
"invented Starweb.[6] Flying Buffalo released it as its second PBM" -> " invented Starweb which Flying Buffalo released as its second PBM"
Done.
"mimeographed" pardon my ignorance, can you explain this?
I confess to being a novice here as well. It's an small, inexpensive, early version of a photocopy machine. I added a Wikilink to it. At first I was going to just remove it—and I still can if you think it better without—but I thought it would provide an interesting, and encyclopedic, historical aspect of these early PBMs and their origin period.
"as play-by-mail magazines" PBM
Done.
"Starweb is still available for play in the 21st century" Could you say "As of 2021"?
I changed it to "today" so it doesn't go stale next year.
Changed to "As of 2021" as you suggested based on WP:PRECISELANG.
"available for play by mail" PBM
I changed this to "available for play by postal mail" since I was trying to highlight that it was still available for play in that format whereas PBM is somewhat of an umbrella term.
"editors of Flagship Magazine provided" overlinked.
Delinked
"18 turns" eighteen (as you have twenty in the same sentence)
Fixed. Good catch, thanks.
"Rick Loomis, the founder of Flying Buffalo Inc., stated" don't think you need to repeat this factoid.
Agreed, removed.
"issue of The Space Gamer.[21] Reese" overlinked.
Delinked.
"game for White Dwarf in" overlinked.
Delinked.
"issue of Challenge magazine" overlinked.
Delinked.
Ensure ref dates are consistently formatted.
Fixed. They should be consistent now.
That's all I have on a first read.  The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:13, 31 August 2021 (UTC)

Greatly appreciate the review The Rambling Man!--Airborne84 (talk) 01:56, 1 September 2021 (UTC)