# Talk:Ron and Tammy

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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 16:12, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
Hi, I have a few questions/comments.

"In the episode, the library department tries to take the pit from Leslie. Ron's ex-wife" - what is the "pit"? It is not mentioned in the plot section.
Reworded to be more clear. — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
"Donna (Retta) insists to Leslie that the arrangement is a mistake because the two are crazy together." - "crazy together" - Is that a colloquialism?
Reworded. — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
'Offerman responded, "Yeah, that would be amazing." ' Not sure what this means in the context of the wikipedia article. It makes a little more sense in the news article because more context is given there than is lacking here.
I just mean to convey that Offerman was very responsive to the idea. I've dropped the quote and paraphrased instead. — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
"Offerman accidentally pulled a diner table out of the wall while Mullally laid on top of it." Do you mean "while Mullally was lying on top of it"? (Although I can't feature how she would be lying on top of a wall)
I tried to make this more clear as well. — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
Perhaps it should be emphasized somewhere that the actors playing Ron and Tammy are real world husband and wife. I think it is only mentioned in the lead, and I had to spend some time figuring out who was married to whom amidst all the names, real and fictional.
The first paragraph of the production section says, "Mullally is the real-life wife of Nick Offerman, who plays Ron Swanson in Parks and Recreation." Do you think I should reword the sentence to place more emphasis on it? Some specific wording suggestions would be helpful... — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
"in exchange for a 40 percent commission and Brandon" - I don't get the "and Brandon" part.
That's a mistake, I'm not sure where it came from. Dropped it. — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
"2.2 rating/6 share" - what does the rating mean, a 6 percent share?
Added wording to explain this. — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
"Steve Heisler from The A.V. Club praised the episode and the performance of Swanson" - I had to do a search to find out who Swanson was. Most of the time you call him "Ron". I think you need to be consistent as there are already so many names and characters. And Swanson is the character's name, right? So he critic is praising the performance of a character? Am I misunderstanding?
That should refer to Offerman, not Swanson. Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
Xtzou (Talk) 16:12, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! — Hunter Kahn 18:40, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
Thanks! Another nicely written piece.  Xtzou (Talk) 19:03, 13 April 2010 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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Overall:
Pass or Fail: Pass! 

Congradulations! Xtzou (Talk) 19:03, 13 April 2010 (UTC)