# Talk:Robby Fabbri

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Reviewer: Nova Crystallis (talk · contribs) 17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Reviewing later. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 17:44, 1 July 2020 (UTC)

Summarizing four years with the Blues into two sentences in the lead might not be sufficient.  Done
His mother's name is mentioned in ref 6, maybe add it on to the sentence about his heritage?
Found his dad's name too. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:03, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
I know it's split between sections, but having two sentences beginning with "Growing up" doesn't sound that good.  Done
"and played with the year above his with" Who's "his" in this case?  Done
"150lbs" {{convert}} needed for this and 160lbs. Done
Done HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 01:03, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
"replace centre Tanner Richard on the team's" Might bet better to say the Rebels' first line for clarity. Done
"the Windsor Spitfires where he recorded one assist" Comma after Spitfires. Done
This is a better source for ref 17.  Done
"of the Game 1" Remove the "the" or go with "of the first game".  Done
"resulting in a 10 game suspension" That's not Fabbri getting suspended, right?
Right, it was the guy who hit him. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC)
"However" x 3 WP:EDITORIAL. Done
Make sure you link the penalties and use the correct link for the coronavirus.  Done
Ref 67 got deleted, you will want to find a new source. Done
Deleted ref and removed name
That should be it. Nova Crystallis (Talk) 06:45, 8 July 2020 (UTC)

Nova Crystallis, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:19, 8 July 2020 (UTC)