# Talk:SMS Iltis (1878)

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Nominator: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 18:01, 21 May 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:38, 23 June 2025 (UTC)

I'll get to this soon. Jaguar (talk) 15:38, 23 June 2025 (UTC)

Lead
"In 1896, while sailing to Qingdao, Iltis was caught in a typhoon, which drove her aground and quickly broke her hull in half" - I think this will read better as In 1896, a typhoon drove Iltis aground en route to Qingdao, breaking her hull in half.
Done
Body
"...she and the screw corvette Freya, along with several Chinese gunboats, searched unsuccessfully in Mirs Bay for a group of pirates who had attacked the German barque Occident" - perhaps try In late January 1881, Iltis, the screw corvette Freya, and several Chinese gunboats unsuccessfully searched Mirs Bay for pirates who had attacked the German barque Occident. - I believe this reduces repetition slightly
Works for me
"but on 28 August, she was ordered south again; the Anglo-Egyptian War had broken out in July" - entirely up to you, but perhaps but was ordered south again on 28 August following the outbreak of the Anglo-Egyptian War in July
I'm not sure I like this one - the sentence is fairly long, and the semi colon gives it a bit more pointed of a break
"Germany (and Britain) disputed Spain's claim to own the islands" - no need for brackets
Done
"and so on 25 July, the German government informed its Spanish counterpart that it intended to raise the German flag over the main islands in the chain; Iltis was sent there for this purpose." - I think the sentence is too long and can be split: On 25 July, the German government informed Spain of its intention to raise the German flag over the main islands, and Iltis was dispatched to carry out the operation.
Sounds good to me
"By the time she passed Weihaiwei at around 12:00" - is worth specifying this was British Weihaiwei at the time
It wasn't British yet - they signed the lease in 1898
I enjoyed reading through this one, sounds like the Iltis was esteemed indeed. I've made a few prose suggestions for you - nothing too major, but will leave on hold for now and will promote when acknowledged!  Jaguar (talk) 20:45, 24 June 2025 (UTC)

Thanks for reviewing another article! Parsecboy (talk) 12:53, 27 June 2025 (UTC)
@Jaguar: - I think you might have lost track of this one, can you take a look? Thanks. Parsecboy (talk) 19:24, 28 July 2025 (UTC)
My apologies for the delay, real life has been chaotic lately.  Jaguar (talk) 12:46, 2 August 2025 (UTC)