# Talk:Tropical Storm Koni

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:59, 15 December 2013 (UTC)

Since the only damage total lists both currencies, you should adjust the note
"A subtropical ridge to the north steered Gilas westward for much of its initial stages" - disagree with using the PAGASA name here, since JMA is the official agency and they kept it as a TD
"persistent albeit moderate wind shear" - why the albeit?
You should use PAGASA's report, as far as damage and deaths
Any reason you didn't use this for the deaths? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  17:39, 23 December 2013 (UTC)
"heavy rainfall fell" - doesn't sound right
" Another person was killed in Tam Diep after they were hit by a prostrated tree" - was it male or female? If you don't know, find a way to avoid saying "they"
"with an additional 18 persons injured" - that math doesn't add up considering the preceding sentences
All in all pretty good! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:59, 15 December 2013 (UTC)