# Talk:Typhoon Dinah (1987)

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 23:31, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
Hello YE. I will be reviewing this article this evening. While it's not a bad article, I have quite a few things that I'll need you to fix. Most of them are pretty minor though--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 4 July 2017 (UTC)

"An area of low pressure developed near Guam on August 19," - You linked the Philippines in the previous sentence. Why not link Guam here? Also, link low-pressure area
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"Intensification was initially gradual, but Dinah became a typhoon early on August 24, and subsequently began to intensify at a faster pace. " - Considering that intensification was gradual, it's not really surprising that Dinah didn't become a typhoon until August 24. So you could say "Intensification was initially gradual, with Dinah becoming a typhoon early on August 24, before it subsequently intensified at a faster pace."
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"The system then began to recurved towards southwestern Japan" - "recurve", not "recurved"
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
You should mention the damage total in Japan because it accounts for more than 90% of the overall damage
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"poorly organized area of disturbed weather that formed on August 18" - Make sure you state that it formed near Guam on August 18
Added. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"At 06:00 UTC on August 19" - Wikilink Coordinated Universal Time
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"Shortly after the upgrade, the depression then began to turn west in response to a subtropical high to its north." - I don't think the word "then" is necessary
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"Following an increase in Dvorak classifications,[2] the JTWC classified the depression as Tropical Storm Dinah." - On what date was this? I'm guessing August 22. But there should be the date here considering you're three sentences into this paragraph and you didn't mention a date until the 6th sentence"
Noted. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"the JMA estimated that Dinah reached its maximum intensity and minimum barometric pressure of 185 km/h (115 mph) and 915 mbar (27.0 inHg) respectively at noon on August 26." - Say "maximum sustained wind speed" instead of "maximum intensity" because intensity is based on pressure. Also, comma before and after "respectively"
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"and assigned it with the local name Luding"
Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"including 236 mm (9.3 in) during a day" - It would be better saying "during one day" or "in one day"
Former works. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
"Nationwide, a total of 432 structures received flooded,[14] 33 people were killed, 52 were unaccounted for,[15] and 4,372 buildings were destroyed," - First, I think you meant to say "432 structures were flooded". Next, I think you should move the "4,372 building were destroyed" to the second spot because those are the most similar. So right after the 432 structures that were flooded
Did something else because I like to keep the X were destroyed, leaving Y homeless stuff together. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
Back to that damage total. How did you come up with that? I understand that sometimes you'll have an overall total that doesn't match with adding up the state or national totals. If you have a source that says $679.1 million (the infobox total), go ahead and cite that, but it looks to me like the totals were added. All I'm seeing is $604 million for Japan and $39.1 million for South Korea, which adds up to only $643.1 million. Even if the Okinawa ($1.3 million) and U.S. military bases ($6.7 million) totals weren't counted in the $604 million total, that still only equals $651.1 million
Should be 643.1. Don't know how I got the 679.1... YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
That should it be.--12george1 (talk) 23:31, 4 July 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the review again. YE Pacific Hurricane 23:49, 4 July 2017 (UTC)
Whoa, that was quick. I'll be passing this article now--12george1 (talk) 23:54, 4 July 2017 (UTC)

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