# Talk:Renaissance Girls

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Reviewer: CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs) 04:25, 1 October 2016 (UTC)

Hello, my name is CaliforniaDreamsFan, and I'll be reviewing your article! Full review coming soon, so stay tuned! 


### Lead section
Remove "recorded" before "by Danish recording artist"; slight repetition.
Remove "solely" after "The track was"; repetition


### Background and composition
Add "eponymous" before "second studio album", since you haven't actually notified the reader's name after the lead.
Add "her third record" before Wish Bone, and a comma before it as well.
Also, is it Dave Sitek or David Andrew Sitek? Be consistent through the article please.


### Critical reception
Add "it" after called on the very last sentence for AllMusic.


### Music video
What format was the video released on? YouTube? Vevo? Specify please.
You synopsis of the video bares no citations whatsoever; try and incorporate your YouTube (yes, I know its released on YouTube, but still) through the start and end of the paragraph please.
Remove "several" if there are only two critiques here (you can keep it if you intend to add more).


### Release history
Small personal point cause it's not my cup-of-tea, but I would personally merge both the sub-headings into just Release history. It's well organised, but that's just my opinion.


### Overall GA conclusion
A really good article! On hold for 7 days for additional editing. Please ping me for any inquires or when you have finished! Good luck 

@CaliforniaDreamsFan: All done! Thank you so much once again! Carbrera (talk) 18:07, 1 October 2016 (UTC)
Passing!  CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 07:43, 4 October 2016 (UTC)