# Talk:Start the Party (album)

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 21:12, 2 November 2020 (UTC)

I will try to have this completely reviewed by tomorrow --K. Peake 21:12, 2 November 2020 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Genre is unsourced; just because they are a post-hardcore band, does not automatically make the album that genre
The word "record label" is not needed in the lead since that context is unnecessary here
"for their third studio album" → "for their third studio album,"
"recorded Start the Party with" → "recorded the album with" though you need to mention next to his reference in the first section that he was producer
"Start the Party revolves around party-going; it was compared to" → "It revolves around party-going, having received comparisons to"
"of the Foo Fighters, and" → "of the Foo Fighters and"
"Initial promotion consisted of a headlining UK tour," I thought the opening sentence was referencing their January 2013 tour of the country?
"embarked upon a UK tour" → "embarked on a UK tour"
"Start the Party reached" → "The album reached"
"in the UK album charts, while "Start the Party" and" → "on the UK Albums Chart. "Start the Party" and" with the wikilink; suggesting splitting since the last para is currently only two sentences long which is definitely too short


### Background and production
Target crowd-funded to Crowdfunding
"While writing it," → "While writing the album,"
"or label to" → "or record label to"
"The band promoted" → "The Blackout promoted"
"of their previous tours," → "of their touring,"
"They recorded with" → "The band recorded with"
"The band initially planned" → "The Blackout initially planned"
"The Blackout" while Borland's" → "The Blackout", while Borland's"
"when they band realised" → "when the band realised"


### Composition and lyrics
"at the moment"." → "at the moment."" since that is a full quote
"a hip-hop-less version" → "a hip hop-less version" with the target
"drew comparison to" → "drew comparisons to"
"The record had less" → "The album has less"
"Butler and Smith said" → "Smith and vocalist Gavin Butler said" since he should be introduced earlier in the article instead
"leans on the band's" → "leans toward the Blackout's"
"is one of the album's" → "is one of Start the Party's"
Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
"about those of others." → "about the lives of others."
"This is followed by" → "The track is followed by"
"which has an introduction" → "which has an intro"


### Release and touring
Retitle to Release and promotion
Img main text should instead say that they toured throughout 2013
"On 17 September," → "On 17 September of that year,"
"the following January." → "in January 2013"
"through the band's website." → "through the Blackout's website."
"the UK in October." → "the UK in October 2013."
"Vocalist Gavin Butler said he was" → "Butler said he was"
"live performances from their" → "live performances from the band's"
"includes covers of" → "features covers of"
Target administration to Business administration
"moved to the respective venues" → "moved to selected venues"
"in January and February," → "in January and February of 2013,"
"on 2 April the same year." → "was released on 2 April 2013."
"from these appearances was used for" → "from their appearance was used in"
"In October," → "In October of that year,"
"in the UK with" → "across the UK, with"
"to last until November," → "to last until November 2013;"
"vocalist Gavin Butler had a" → "Butler had a"
"for January and February 2014," → "for January and February of 2014,"


### Reception
"singable hooks."" → "singable hooks"." for consistency
"found it" → "found the album"
Target pop to Pop music
"Butler's "accessible" → "He further wrote that Butler's "accessible"
"into stars."" → "into stars"."
"said the band" → "admitted that the Blackout"
"polished album,"" → "polished album","
[17] should solely be at the end of the sentence
"said The Blackout come across" → "said the Blackout come across" per MOS:THEMUSIC
Target Scrappy Doo to Scrappy-Doo
"said if the band removed" → "wrote that if the band removed"
"of the expletives" → "of the expletives on Start the Party"
"to Inglis, the record's" → "to Inglis, the album's"
"what the members were" → "what the band members are"
"in the UK album charts." → "on the UK Albums Chart." with the wikilink
Merge the two sentences for the singles, changing where the second currently starts to being after a comma and saying: "while "Runnin' Scared" reached number 35 on the chart."


### Track listing
Target Jason Perry to Jason Perry (singer)
Target DJ Jazzy Jef & the Fresh Prince to DJ Jazzy Jeff & The Fresh Prince


### Personnel
Use the Design sub-heading instead for photography, cover design and artwork


### Charts
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks good at 25.9%
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Ref 4 needs a title saying "Citations regarding..."
WP:OVERLINK of Rock Hard on ref 48
Wikilink Official Charts Company on ref 52
Wikilink YouTube on the first of the eight sources


### External links
Good


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold but good job on how smooth the refs mostly look, great to take on a review for you again after the backlog has finished! --K. Peake 11:13, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
Done. Yeepsi (talk) 11:51, 3 November 2020 (UTC)
Yeepsi  Pass after I completed some brief copyediting, applauds not only for your usual quick response but also a very well-written article! --K. Peake 13:56, 3 November 2020 (UTC)