# Talk:Tom Acker

This source says he was a private in the Army when he was married. Semper fi! FieldMarine (talk) 14:04, 24 April 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Tom Acker/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 11:49, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
Am reviewing for the July 2021 GAN Backlog Drive MWright96 (talk) 11:49, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Lead
"Thomas James Acker (March 7, 1930 – January 4, 2021) was an American baseball pitcher who played four seasons in Major League Baseball (MLB). He played his entire career for the Cincinnati Reds from 1956 to 1959." - how about merging these two sentences together so it reads Thomas James Acker (March 7, 1930 – January 4, 2021) was an American baseball pitcher who played his entire career for the Cincinnati Reds in four seasons of Major League Baseball (MLB) from 1956 to 1959.
Sure, that works. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
How about wikilinking the term draft for non-sports readers only on the first mention?
I linked in the second mention in the lead, because the first was right after the linked Buffalo Bisons and I want to avoid MOS:SEAOFBLUE.  Hope that's alright. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
Cincinnati Reds does not need be wikilinked twice in the lead
Fixed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
"He played his last game on September 20, 1959. He subsequently worked at the Meadowlands Racetrack from its opening in 1976 until 1992." - simiar issue to the first point in this section
Merged. —Bloom6132 (talk) 18:27, 2 July 2021 (UTC)


### Early life
Wikilink amateur free agent to the relevant article for non-sports reade
Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)


### Minor leagues
"and 213 strikeouts over 201 innings" - innings can be wikilinked
I linked that back in the "Early life" section ("102 strikeouts in 63 innings pitched".  Should I link it in this section too, or will that be MOS:DUPLINK? —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
I was referring to Inning as a whole MWright96 (talk) 17:47, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
@MWright96: done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 18:27, 2 July 2021 (UTC)


### Cincinnati Reds (1956–1959)
"and striking out three (including Gene Baker, Acker's first batter faced)[2] over 2 innings in a 12–1 loss to the Chicago Cubs." - try to avoid having a reference positioned like this
Fixed – moved to the end of the sentence. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
"The Athletics assigned him to Richmond Virginians," - to the
Fixed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)


### Post-playing career
"After retiring from baseball, Acker went back home to Bergen County, New Jersey. He constructed a house in Wyckoff and was employed by a trucking company." - how about merging these two sentences together
Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
"After retiring from baseball, Acker went back home" - returned to be more concise
Done. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:19, 2 July 2021 (UTC)


### Personal life
"Acker died on January 4, 2021, at his home in Narvon, Pennsylvania." - sentence is a little close to the source verifying it
I've changed "home" to "house" and moved his age to the beginning of the sentence.  Hope the rest is covered by WP:LIMITED, because I cannot use "passed away" due to MOS:EUPHEMISM. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:30, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
Am putting the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above MWright96 (talk) 15:46, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

@MWright96: thanks very much for the review!  I hope I've addressed your comments satisfactorily. —Bloom6132 (talk) 17:30, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
@Bloom6132: Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 18:42, 2 July 2021 (UTC)