# Talk:Sir Hereward Wake, 13th Baronet

I hesitate to use the phrase 'Standard Practice', because it varies so much, but most articles seem to split between References (or Citations), Sources (those used in the article), and Bibliography (Further Reading).
There's a picture of Sir Hereward here https://www.npg.org.uk/collections/search/use-this-image.php?mkey=mw236946; says you can download it for CC (free, or small donation).
Robinvp11 (talk) 09:32, 1 June 2020 (UTC)

I looked at the NPG page. It allows you to download the image for use under CC BY-NC-ND, which we can't use; our content need to be usable by everyone (so not NC) and editable likewise (so not ND). I believe I found an image we can use, though. --GRuban (talk) 15:59, 19 June 2020 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Sir Hereward Wake, 13th Baronet/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 13:28, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Hi, I'll take this one. Feel free to challenge any of my comments you think to be incorrect!

No copyvio detected
Duplicated links: aide de camp and Courteenhall
removed - Dumelow (talk) 14:40, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
File:King's Royal Rifle Corps by Harry Payne.JPG needs a US PD tag. It's also not the highest quality image and while I think it works as is, a replacement would not go amiss if possible. Other images are good.
Removed, I couldn't find details of its publication and it doesn't add much - Dumelow (talk) 14:40, 6 August 2021 (UTC)


### Lede
"Born into an historic noble family" - This is probably just me but I would much prefer this to read "Born into an historic and noble family"
Added "and" - Dumelow (talk) 14:51, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
"...commanded the 4th battalion" - to capitalise or not to capitalise the "B"? You use "4th Battalion" in the infobox; you change between capitalising battalion and not doing so throughout the article.
I've seen it both ways, decapitalised all for consistency
Link Territorial Army
Done - Dumelow (talk) 14:51, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
The infobox states that he died in Winchester but this is not stated or cited in the main text.
I didn't add it but have removed as couldn't find any corroboration anywhere - Dumelow (talk) 14:51, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Ibid for the awarding of his CB.
Added to main text.  I couldn't find the notice of award but know what date he had it by - Dumelow (talk) 14:51, 6 August 2021 (UTC)


### Early life
The reference for his date of birth only says he was born in 1876, not that it was on 11 February; the reference for his DOB in the infobox will be unnecessary if this is fixed.
Moved ref to main text.  It is on the actual digital copy of his service record, not the webpage.  If you have a free National Archives account you can add the record to your basket and download it (for free) - Dumelow (talk) 14:55, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
"Hereward Wake was educated at Eton College and could speak French." - Did he learn French at Eton or is this an aside? What makes this anything but trivia?
Not really relevant, removed - Dumelow (talk) 14:55, 6 August 2021 (UTC)


### Boer war
"He was wounded in action and was mentioned in dispatches on 3 February and 9 March 1900." - was he wounded in action on the dates that he was also mentioned in dispatches? Could be clarified
Not at the same time.  His record only notes that he was wounded during the war.  Tried to clarify this - Dumelow (talk) 14:55, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
"He was awarded the regimental rank" - awarded isn't the right word for this. Perhaps "advanced to" or "confirmed in"?
Thanks, changed to "advanced to" - Dumelow (talk) 14:55, 6 August 2021 (UTC)


### First World War
"held a position at the War Office." - can you expand on what this position was?
Unfortunately not, the source just says he was there - Dumelow (talk) 14:58, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Scratch that, found a reference that he was a liaison with The Admiralty - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
References 13 and 14 link to error pages
Oops, fixed - Dumelow (talk) 14:58, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
I think you could provide some more detail on his WW1 service. For example this [1] PhD thesis highlights his work on the Supreme War Council and his role heading 'E' branch reviewing enemy strategy. It also seems his staff service was closely linked to Sir Henry Wilson which might be worth noting.
Oh, good find.  I've managed to take some bits from this and find some other mentions elsewhere to greatly expand the WWI section - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Roade needs linking
Done - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)


### Later career
Again, Territorial Army needs linking
Done - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)


### Personal life
"The Wakes lived at the ancestral home" - "The Wakes lived at their ancestral home"?
Done - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Link Bicester
Done - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Unless it correlates to a previous piece of information I've missed, "war department" needs linking to something.
Yes that was a bit random.  Hopefully now clarified - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Link Dover Castle
Done - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
"Wake owned a 1599 painting of Drue Drury." - seems trivial.
Agreed, removed - Dumelow (talk) 16:01, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Reference 30 links to the generic FamilySearch sign in page, needs changing or noting that an account is required etc
Tagged as (subscription required) - Dumelow (talk) 16:03, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Reference 32 needs a note that a Times account is required to read
Tagged as (subscription required) - Dumelow (talk) 16:03, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
That's all I have for now. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 13:28, 6 August 2021 (UTC)

Thanks so much for your review and suggestions Pickersgill-Cunliffe. That PhD thesis was especially useful.  I think I've addressed everything above - Dumelow (talk) 16:03, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
You're welcome. Having had a further delve I've also come across this [2] which provides his roles as GSO3, GSO2, AND GSO1, and this [3] which as well as briefly mentioning Wake on occasion provides an image of Wake and Roberts' staff in 1900. Further comments:
"and was awarded the Distinguished Service Order on 29 November 1900." - the article states that Wake was on the staff until 1 March 1901 but this section suggests he was awarded the DSO for his work in The Orange Free State, et al, before this staff period had ended. Should be clarified and/or the chronology changed to make more sense.
Reordered this - Dumelow (talk) 19:13, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
The first mention of Amery is now before your link and introduction of him.
Fixed - Dumelow (talk) 19:13, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
If you're going to stylise "'E Branch'" as such then you should do the same for "A Branch"
Now rendered as plain text - Dumelow (talk) 19:13, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Link keep
Done - Dumelow (talk) 19:13, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Reference 7 has an error (WOlverhampton)
Fixed - Dumelow (talk) 19:13, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
With all the changes made to the article I'd suggest an update to the lede to reflect this.
Good point, I've had a go - Dumelow (talk) 06:17, 7 August 2021 (UTC)
Similarly, the references section has grown considerably and I think a separate bibliography section to house your long-form book citations would not go amiss, allowing you to make the references themselves simpler in short-form.
Agreed and done - Dumelow (talk) 06:17, 7 August 2021 (UTC)
- Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:22, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Thanks again Pickersgill-Cunliffe, another good PhD find.  I've incorporated the info from your first link but couldn't access the second (it prompts me to log in).  I've got the lead and refs still to sort otherwise - Dumelow (talk) 19:13, 6 August 2021 (UTC)
Happy with all the changes you have made; some of those new sources were great finds. Passing as satisfying the good article criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 12:20, 7 August 2021 (UTC)
Thanks Pickersgill-Cunliffe for a great GA review, the article has really improved over the past few days - Dumelow (talk) 19:20, 8 August 2021 (UTC)