# Talk:William Henry Harrison III

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Reviewer: SerAntoniDeMiloni (talk · contribs) 16:34, 10 June 2020 (UTC)

Hi again Jon698, I'll also be reviewing this one of your nominations. Looks well written so far. I'll read through and make suggestions for improvement in order to get to GA. SerAntoniDeMiloni (talk) 16:34, 10 June 2020 (UTC)
- I've attached the pre-review feedback below. It would be great if you could respond to each point. Thanks SerAntoniDeMiloni (talk) 20:13, 17 June 2020 (UTC)


### Review
#### Intro
Intro here is also quite short. Would it be possible to do the same longer intro as in the GA I just accepted?


#### Career
It may be worth rewording "On December 2, 1931, he was elected as president of the Universal Club which held its meetings at the Columbia Club, which was formed by local Republicans who had supported the presidential campaign of Benjamin Harrison." as well as elaborating as to what it was?
Rest is all fine.


#### Images
Are there any more images of him/acts he was involved in available online? These would help compliment the article.


#### References
These seem fine. No problems here.


### Overall
Well written. The intro could be expanded, as was done in Fielding L. Wright. A couple of other minor points, but this should be GA status if the above can be done. Best, SerAntoniDeMiloni (talk) 20:13, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Hi Jon698. I'll just put this on hold while you address the above :) SerAntoniDeMiloni (talk) 13:18, 20 June 2020 (UTC)
@SerAntoniDeMiloni: Thank you for doing these reviews. I have added two images from his congressional career and I have lengthened the lead. What is your opinion on the article now? - Jon698 (talk) 00:29 21 June 2020 (UTC)
@Jon698:. The article is definitely better. It may still be worth describing what the Universal Club is. I've just added the presidential link to the lead, as well as his post-politics. (Feel free to remove or change this) SerAntoniDeMiloni (talk) 09:56, 21 June 2020 (UTC)
@SerAntoniDeMiloni: I have added information about the Universal Club and approve of your edits. - Jon698 (talk) 08:15 24 June 2020 (UTC)
@Jon698: All looks good. I'd be happy to review now.


### Review Final
Hi Jon698. Enjoy the GA! 

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: