# Talk:Tropical Storm Julio (2008)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Tropical Storm Julio (2008)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Hi, I will be reviewing this article. On reading through it, I saw only a few small wording problems. Otherwise, it seems like a wonderful article. I especially like the way you were able to wikilink most meteorological terms. I will read through it again and make some comments. —Mattisse (Talk) 16:01, 30 August 2008 (UTC)

"which hit southwestern Mexico in July" - this is nit picky but is "hit" an encyclopedic word for this event?
"Continued shear left the center partially exposed from the thunderstorm activity, though upper level conditions gradually became more favorable for strengthening." - What does this mean?
"Moisture from Julio produced thunderstorms across Arizona, including one near Chandler which produced winds of 75 mph (120 km/h);" - for variety, can you think of a way not to use "produced" twice in the same sentence?
I wish the article Atmospheric convection explained what a convection is more clearly. I asked the editor of  another weather article and the answer was "thunderstorm". Is that what you mean here when you use "convection" and "deep convection"?
A depression is an area of low pressure? (I am really trying to understand the dynamics of what is happening in the article.)
Did this storm have an "eye" or a core?
Thanks for the review! I substituted "hit" with a more appropriate word. The second point was explained better. "Produced" has been varied. I believe I explained the first instance of convection better, as yes, convection is a good synonym for thunderstorms. A tropical depression is the weakest form of a tropical cyclone, and as such I linked it to tropical cyclone scales. Lastly, no, the storm didn't have an "eye", since it was a weak tropical storm. It had a core of convection, but never a well-defined inner core of convection. Hope that settles things! ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:46, 31 August 2008 (UTC)
*One more question: When you say "third tropical cyclone to make landfall in the basin during the season", are you refering to the Gulf of California basin?

No... we are referring to the East Pacific Ocean basin.
Itfc+canes=me (talk) 20:41, 31 August 2008 (UTC)

Could you clarify that in the article?
I clarified, and I hope all is well for the article. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:14, 1 September 2008 (UTC)
I would work on the article but I'm snowed under with homework already.... Itfc+canes=me (talk) 15:15, 2 September 2008 (UTC)
GA review (see here for criteria)
Final GA review

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 

—Mattisse (Talk) 17:02, 2 September 2008 (UTC)