# Talk:Toil (album)

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 19:10, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:10, 22 April 2013 (UTC)


### Initial comments
On first pass, this looks strong. It's brief, but there's presumably not a lot of content and analysis out there on this. It's well-organized and appears to cover main aspects. Again, thanks for your work on it.
Quibbles to address:

"The song has been seen as symbol of the band's faith."  Can we add a citation for this interpretation? Otherwise, it should probably be deleted as a tiny bit of original research. -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:37, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
 Done --Guerillero | My Talk 22:49, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
"Both the album and the single failed to chart, unlike Flatfoot 56's previous album, which peaked at number two on the Billboard Heatseekers Chart." -- this fact should appear in the body of the article if it's going to be in the lead, per WP:LEAD. Also, comparing it to the band's previous album seems like just a tiny bit of original research if no sources make this comparison. It would be better to just say "Both the album and the single failed to chart", I think, and offer a citation for that. -- Khazar2 (talk) 19:43, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
I changed this. Does it sound better? --Guerillero | My Talk 23:01, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
Note that I also made some copyedits for grammar and style as I went, including adding one inline citation that got omitted. Please take a look at my edits to make sure I didn't inadvertently introduce any error, and feel free to revert anything you disagree with! -- Khazar2 (talk) 20:00, 22 April 2013 (UTC)

I fixed or removed the dead links --Guerillero | My Talk 22:49, 22 April 2013 (UTC)
Thanks! Dead links are permissible under the GA criteria, but obviously it's better to have them fixed. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:19, 23 April 2013 (UTC)


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