# Talk:The Dog and Pony Show

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 20:33, 17 May 2014 (UTC)
Hi June, I would be happy to review this one. Will add my comments soon. Ruby 2010/2013 20:33, 17 May 2014 (UTC)

Comments
Is there a suitable reference you could cite for that explanatory "dog and pony show" note?
I'll try and find one. I didn't add the note and I have been wondering whether that article really needs it.
I've added a reference, I hope it's okay. - JuneGloom  Talk 00:07, 29 May 2014 (UTC)
I've seen many episode articles briefly summarize the series in the lead. Could you add something to this effect in the first paragraph? Just a suggestion though; no obligation to act on it.
Done. Let me know if it needs tweaking though.
"Mr.Wick asks what they ..." -- space needed
Done.
Does the episode end there? Or is the dog storyline shown as resolved (i.e. Mrs. Lauder gets "her" dog)?
The dog kinda disappeared once the focus moved onto the striptease. Neither it or Mrs. Lauder were mentioned or seen again.
Suggest identifying Borden and Oppenheimer's relationship to the series (creators? producers? etc).
Done.
"...were not allowed to perform on the show after being stopped by the immigration department because..." I assume this was the American immigration department? It might be good to specify.
Done.
"While Stiles joked that the episode was the first time he had been "totally naked" since he was cast in the show." -- this is a fragmented sentence; suggest combining with previous sentence
Done.
He also clarified that the cast were wore pouches to protect their modesty." -- I think there may be an extra word thrown in there.
Fixed.
The lead says 12.4 million viewers, while the reception section mentions 12.4 million households. Which one is correct?
The latter. I am not good at interpreting US ratings, so I suspect this isn't going to be the last time that I've got it wrong.
Otherwise, looks good! As you can see, mainly minor nitpicks; I'll place this on hold for the usual seven days, and return for a final glance-over once my comments have been responded to. Thanks! Ruby 2010/2013 19:13, 26 May 2014 (UTC)

Hey, thank you for the review! - JuneGloom  Talk 22:14, 26 May 2014 (UTC)
Your changes look good! I checked the ratings citation for accuracy, and it now matches the article's content (though I made a small tweak to the citation, since it was technically an Associated Press story -- Highbeam doesn't make this very clear). Well done! I am passing it now. Ruby 2010/2013 02:07, 29 May 2014 (UTC)
Thank you for that, and for passing the article. :) - JuneGloom  Talk 13:31, 29 May 2014 (UTC)