# Talk:San Marino in the Eurovision Song Contest 2016

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:17, 20 February 2021 (UTC)

I will review this; hopefully you are successful in your goal to create a GT! --K. Peake 11:17, 20 February 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
Target Serhat to Serhat (singer)
Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
Wikilink disco
"in Europe in" → "across Europe in"
Remove wikilink on Eurovision Song Contest
 Done


### Background
"to the grand final, however in" → "for the grand final; however, in"
[1] should be invoked at the end of the para instead of separately for the last two sentences since it backs up both of them
Allessandro Capicchioni → Alessandro Capicchioni
"By 26 November," → "By 26 November 2015,"
 Done


### Before Eurovision
#### Internal selection
Target SMRTV to San Marino RTV on the img text
"and Sammarinese Head of Delegation Alessandro Capicchioni were" → "and Capicchioni were"
The previous compositions are not directly mentioned, though 9 does say the artists have previous experience
The Piste Rouge Studios and Guy Waku arrangement are not sourced, even though the city is and the other arranger
Both of the above are in the J. Weaver ESCToday source. I've moved it up to the middle. Grk1011 (talk) 21:40, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
Mention the info about composers not having met from 9
Thanks for pointing this out! Let me know if you approve of the wording. Grk1011 (talk) 21:40, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
 Done


#### Song changes
Neither of the sources say anything about the previous version being a ballad so add [15] in this para as well as the other, but target to Sentimental ballad
Wikilink disco
Remove target on EP
Shouldn't you mention it being cut down to a three-minute edit?
Wiwibloggs should not be italicised
 Done


#### Promotion
"presentation on 9 March 2015." → "presentation on 9 March 2016."
"was filmed in Paris." → "was filmed in Paris with a team of 37 people." per the source
"He appeared on" → "For the tour, he appeared on"
Target TVM to Television Malta
"On 11 May," → "On 11 May 2016,"
Wikilink Hard Rock Cafe
Wikilink Stockholm
"by fifteen participants of" → "by 15 participants of" per MOS:NUM
 Done


### At Eurovision
Remove wikilink on Stockholm
You have not added the appropriate ref after the Eurovision rules
"from previous contests with" → "from previous contests, with"
Target first semi-final to Eurovision Song Contest 2016#Semi-final 1
"to perform in position 8," → "to perform in position eight," per MOS:NUM
The announcement from Irol MC is not mentioned by [26]
 Done


#### Semi-final
Img looks good!
"on 9 and 10 May." → "on 9 and 10 May 2016."
"performing at a microphone stand" the source says he performed at floor level
"perform a choreographed routine" → "delivered a choreographed routine"
 Done


#### Voting
Where is the part about no relation being allowed sourced?
It said "connection", so I changed the wording to be more precise. Grk1011 (talk) 21:40, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
"and grand final" → "and the grand final"
 Done


##### Points awarded to San Marino
Good


##### Points awarded by San Marino
Good


##### Detailed voting results
[34][33] should be put in numerical order
 Done


### References
Copyvio score looks a bit too high at 43.2%; trim the Wiwibloggs quote to fix this
Trimmed the quote. Grk1011 (talk) 21:40, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Fix MOS:QWQ issues with ref 9
 Done


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed, but this was the first time ever one of your articles had a copyvio issue, weirdly. --K. Peake 20:43, 20 February 2021 (UTC)
I would assume it's because it's a direct quote from the article and a couple sentences long. It's attributed as such, so I believe that is allowed. It's not copying someone's "work". I'll take a look at the rest of the items tomorrow. Grk1011 (talk) 22:12, 20 February 2021 (UTC)
Grk1011 Will be great to see your full-on response soon, but I thought I'd issue a statement about the above issue while it's most relevant. WP:OVERQUOTE says, "Do not overquote from sources, that is have too many direct quotations or excerpts that are too long." This is somewhat of an excerpt, so cut the amount of quoting or maybe paraphrase. --K. Peake 07:12, 21 February 2021 (UTC)
Should be all set! Let me know if there is anything else that I may have missed. Grk1011 (talk) 21:40, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
Grk1011 I do approve of your wording for the info about them not having met and for future reference, a recommendation from me would be to make sure anything relevant from sources is cited to pass the broadness criterion properly. It is also interesting to see you mark the sections as done separately; nice response method, I would recommend doing that again in the future!  Pass now though, I do not see any further issues! --K. Peake 21:54, 22 February 2021 (UTC)
I usually do all of the edits in one sitting so I don't have trouble tracking my progress, but this one required it to be spaced out given my work load. I'll keep that in mind for future reviews! Grk1011 (talk) 21:58, 22 February 2021 (UTC)