# Talk:Theodorious Paleologus

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Reviewer: The Most Comfortable Chair (talk · contribs) 16:27, 1 October 2020 (UTC)
Hello. I will have the review shortly. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 16:27, 1 October 2020 (UTC)


### Lead
"Theodore was a sailor and privateer on board the ship Charles II, captained by a man by the name Charles Gibson" — "by a man by the name" seems a little redundant. Wouldn't it be more focused to write it as "Theodore was a sailor and privateer on board the ship Charles II, captained by Charles Gibson" or "Theodore was a sailor and privateer on board the ship Charles II, captained by a Charles Gibson"?
Yeah, I agree. removed "a man by the name". Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:23, 2 October 2020 (UTC)


### Biography
"A 1685 map of Barbados identifies a plantation near St John's church as the "Paleologus and Beal" plantation, indicating that Ferdinand's former plantation had probably been split by Theodore and Rebecca and that Theodore was now the business partner of Rebecca's new husband, probably Captain Alexander Beale, recorded in the census papers of 1679 as owning 111 acres of land and 70 slaves." — It is a bit too lengthy. Perhaps it could be split into two sentences.
Split it into three sentences. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:23, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
"Theodore made a will on 1 August 1693, appointing as his executor "Martha Paleologua", his wife." — Perhaps this would flow better → "Theodore made a will on 1 August 1693, appointing his wife, "Martha Paleologua" as his executor."
Changed to your suggestion. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:23, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
"Charles II" should be linked when first mentioned (in line with the lead) instead of linking "Fancy" since the mutiny and renaming occurred after his death — hence a less relevant detail.
Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:23, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
"He died at sea that same year, near A Coruña in Spain, and was buried at A Coruña shortly thereafter under the name Theodorus Palaeologey." — Avoid writing "A Coruña" twice in the same sentence.
Removed the first one. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:23, 2 October 2020 (UTC)


### Miscellaneous
Minor point, but the article is listed in only three categories and a subject like this should have a lot many entries.
I'm not that good with categories but I've added three more. If there are any you feel are missing you're of course free to add more as well. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:23, 2 October 2020 (UTC)
That will be all for now. The article is compact and very well-written, and it should pass. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 11:03, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for reviewing! I've responded to all your concerns. Ichthyovenator (talk) 12:23, 2 October 2020 (UTC)


### Final
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 
The article is short but written brilliantly. It has been a pleasure reviewing this and it meets the criteria. Thank you for your hard work! — The Most Comfortable Chair 12:53, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

Excuse me, 
the name of Paleologus' wife in the article is given as Martha Bradbury and it is claimed that this woman was the daughter of a Christopher Bradbury but a quick check of the parish records of St. Michael, Barbados for 1684 shows that when Theodorus Paleologus married Martha Bradbury, she was registered as "Mrs" Martha Bradbury whilst none of the other brides have this title. Surely that would suggest that she was previously married to a man by the surname Bradbury and this was not, in fact, her maiden name.
"Barbados Church Records, 1637-1887", FamilySearch (https://www.familysearch.org/ark:/61903/1:1:QKDS-KNTV : Thu Nov 09 18:16:02 UTC 2023), Entry for Theodorus Paleologus and Martha Bradbury, 14 Oct 1684.
Is this considered first person research? It's a publicly available historical record, so I don't see why it would be. Iynx (talk) 09:48, 28 November 2023 (UTC)