# Talk:Tokoyama

@AirshipJungleman29: Not convinced by your proposal too, I'd like to keep the word tokoyama... I modified the initial hook - OtharLuin (talk) 12:36, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
Is it okay now or do you want further changes AirshipJungleman29? -- ZooBlazer 15:28, 15 April 2024 (UTC)
Please do not modify the original hook OtharLuin; it makes it confusing for new reviewers. For reference, OtharLuin's alterations are now titled ALT0a and ALT0b. ALT0b is borderline, because I still think that the ability of non-familiar readers to understand the hook and get interested is severely compromised, but if another promoter feels that they can promote, I'll leave it up to them. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 15:33, 15 April 2024 (UTC)