# Talk:People Take Pictures of Each Other

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:16, 5 August 2022 (UTC)

This is going to be reviewed today! --K. Peake 07:16, 5 August 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
Mention in the first sentence that it is from their sixth studio album, The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society (1968)
Done.
Make the second sentence one mentioning the song's writing, singing and recording date
Done.
Follow the above with the inspiration, then one sentence of comp and lyrical meaning
Done.
Remove the sequencing sentence since that is not notable and the album can be mentioned in the first sentence
Done.
"The recording features a" → "The song features a" moving this to the comp/lyrics part like I said
Done.
Remove session keyboardist introduction to Nicky Hopkins
Done.
"and others comment that its" → "Others comment that its" to avoid a run-on sentence
Done.
"The Kinks performed the song" → "The Kinks performed "People Take Pictures of Each Other""
Done.


### Background and composition
Quote box looks good!
This section seems disordered; shouldn't you write about inspiration and its place on the album in background then follow with comp and lyrics of the song itself?
Yeah, you're right it was a little out of order. I swapped paragraphs so the composition is discussed before its relation to the other songs on the album, which I think makes sense chronologically.
"and Davies further stated in" → "and Davies eventually stated in"
How about simply "... and Davies stated in ..."
"encourage nostalgia while misleading" → "encourage nostalgia and mislead"
Done.
"Davies wrote it specifically" → "Davies wrote the song specifically"
Done.
Remove wikilink on "Pictures in the Sand"
I think it's acceptable by WP:NSONG: Songs that do not rise to notability for an independent article should redirect to another relevant article, such as ... a prominent album ...
"to photographs,[6] and" → "to photographs and" moving [6] solely to the end of the sentence
Done.
"where the latter features a" → "with the latter featuring a"
Done.
"it serves as a commentary on the album's other tracks," → "the song serves as a commentary on the other tracks,"
Done.
"thinks the song's closing lines" → "thinks the closing lines"
Done.


### Recording and release
Audio sample looks good!
Wikilink acoustic guitar
Done.
"and fast a breathless lead vocal" doesn't make much sense, unless you meant to write "a fast, breathless lead vocal"?
Yes, that was a typo. Fixed.
"rather than hiring session musicians to play it." → "rather than working with hiring session musicians." to be less repetitive
How about ... rather than working with hired session musicians.
Pipe coda to Coda (music)
Done.
Remove wikilink on Pye Records
Done.
"well without it."" → "well without it"." per MOS:QUOTE
Done.
"barely notice it."" → "barely notice it"."
Done.


### Other versions
First para looks good!
"The American rock band" → "American rock band" to avoid starting two consecutive sentences with the
Done.
"over time, adding in part:" → "over time, further adding:"
Done.


### References
Copyvio score looks solid at 34.6%!!!
Remove the author from ref 29 since staff is not a person
Done.


#### Sources
Pipe Overlook Press to The Overlook Press
Done.
Pipe Backbeat Books to UBM Technology Group
Done.


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 08:08, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
Thanks Kyle Peake, response above. Tkbrett (✉) 11:36, 5 August 2022 (UTC)
 Pass now, I understand your reasoning to not implement certain changes! --K. Peake 06:27, 6 August 2022 (UTC)