# Talk:Patsy Torres

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:42, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

I will review this for you now! --K. Peake 07:42, 12 July 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
The pop music genre is not sourced anywhere in the body
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Wikilink trumpet in the infobox
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In the body, the label is identified as Joey Records but it is called Joey International here; which is correct really?
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Patsy Torres Records is not sourced anywhere in the body
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The vocal versality part should be sourced in the body while kept here, though the quote can remain as sourced in the lead
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Wikilink trumpet
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The wedding event is not notable for the lead
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"by record promoter Albert Esquivel and released" → "by Albert Esquivel in 1980, after which they released"
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"and after signing a" → "and she had signed a"
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Pipe Budweiser to Budweiser trademark dispute
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Remove the fact the song was written by her grandfather since that is not notable for the lead
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You can merge the first number-one single part with the elevation into a successful singer sentence
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Remove the names of the predecessors since these are not notable here
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"During this time, Tejano music entered its golden age, and Torres was" → "At this point, Torres was" and only keep the pipe on Billboard itself plus remove the comma after the magazine
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Remove the most-played on radio stations because this is not notable from just two songs
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"the United States warning, children of" → "the United States, warning children of"
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"she signed with" → "the singer signed with"
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Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina
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"Torres was the first female Tejano singer" → "Torres was the first Tejano singer"
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"who helped expand Tejano music's" → "who helped expand the genre's"
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The "Te Juro" part is not notable for the lead; rather start from the award sentence but as "In 1996, Torres won the Songwriter Award..."
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Pipe BMI to Broadcast Music, Inc.
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Merge the fourth para with the above one per overly short size
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"Torres continues her" → "Torres has continued her" but this is not sourced as being ongoing in the body
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"Torres received a doctorate in" → "The singer received doctorates in"
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"who helped spearheaded" → "who helped spearhead" but this fact can be written out and sourced in the body's personal life section
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### Career
#### Early life and career beginnings (1957–1982)
"Her only musical influence" → "Patricia's only musical influence" per MOS:SAMESURNAME and to avoid starting two consecutive sentences with her
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Remove commas next to William Torres
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"several instruments and wrote songs, and who provided Torres" → "several instruments, wrote songs, and provided her"
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"the saxophone, Torres joined" → "the saxophone, Patsy Torres joined" with the wikilink
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Wikilink trumpet
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Pipe Thomas Jefferson High School to Thomas Jefferson High School (San Antonio)
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"a year later joined her sister's band, Blue Harmony, as" → "a year later, joined her sister's band Blue Harmony, as"
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"Her sister influenced her" → "She influenced Torres"
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"Torres eventually toured with Canales and the two bonded," → "The two eventually toured together and former a bond,"
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"who signed the band in" → "who signed Blue Harmony in"
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"provided the band with" → "provided Blue Harmony with"
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#### Music career success (1983–1991)
Mention the year she signed with Cara Records
The book does not provide a year she signed with Cara.
Change to Budweiser and pipe to Budweiser trademark dispute
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"She released her second album" → "She subsequently released her second album"
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"The group disbanded in" → "They disbanded in"
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"the singer remained touring" → "though the singer remained touring"
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Pipe keyboards to Keyboard instrument
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Wikilink bass guitar
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Wikilink hard rock
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"She produced her own music video" → "The singer produced her own music video" with the wikilink
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Pipe Little Joe y la Familia to Little Joe (singer)
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"Her single "Amor Con Amor"" → "The singer's single "Amor Con Amor""
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#### Advocacy and The Positive Force Tour (1990–1994)
"Her Positive Force Tour campaigned" → "The singer's Positive Force Tour campaigned"
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"includes mini skits," → "included mini skits,"
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"She spoke out" → "Torres spoke out"
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Pipe AIDS to HIV/AIDS
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"She has inspired" → "The singer has inspired"
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Does the received part mean she received this or her fans? If the latter, then reword but elsewise keep as current.
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"female singer" while another" → "female singer", while another"
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"three different national shows including" → "three different national shows, including"
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"in University of the Incarnate Word where" → "in the University of the Incarnate Word, where"
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"In 1990, she signed with" → "In 1990, Torres signed with" per this being a new para
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Add what year the album was released
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Pipe WEA Latina to Warner Music Latina
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Pipe country to Country music
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"She also became the" → "The singer also became the"
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"She is considered a" → "Torres is considered a"
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Introduce Con Todo El Corazon; is this her second studio album under the label, an EP, or something else?
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"she helped the "Tejano wave" in 1994 with her "crowd-pleasing concerts."" → "the singer helped the "Tejano wave" in 1994 with her "crowd-pleasing concerts"." per MOS:QUOTE
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#### Decline of Tejano music (1995–present)
The murder article should only be linked on "shooting death", so link Selena to herself
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"Radio stations in the United States" → "Radio stations in the US" per MOS:US
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Pipe regional Mexican music to Regional styles of Mexican music
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"the song was chosen by" → "while the song was chosen by"
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"of the city."" → "of the city"." per MOS:QUOTE
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Pipe BMI to Broadcast Music, Inc.
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"Torres signed with indie" → "Torres signed with indie label" with the pipe, also why is the label named differently here then in the infobox?
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"She was named the" → "Torres was named the"
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Pipe Mammogram to Mammography
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"Mi Amiga" sponsored" → "Mi Amiga", sponsored"
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Pipe Susan G. Komen Foundation to Susan G. Komen for the Cure
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[35] does not back up all of the info before it
Yes it does
"She also served as" → "The singer also served as"
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"and performed with symphonies." → "and perform with symphonies."
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"to continue to dream"." → "to continue to dream."" since this is a full sentence
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Pipe Mexican American to Mexican Americans
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The gap sentence is not backed up by [38]
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"album with the lead single" → "album, with the lead single" with the wikilink
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"[in Tejano music]". showcasing" → "[in Tejano music]", showcasing"
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### Personal life
Remove comma before David Lucero, however the exact date is not sourced
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"for Lucero in 1994, Torres" → "for Lucero in 1994; Torres"
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"my one and only."" → "my one and only"." per MOS:QUOTE
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"She believes in" → "The singer has belief in"
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### Discography
Good


### See also
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks strong at 24.2%!!!


### Works cited
I'm not sure about the reliability of the YouTube video; is that really the account of the awards show because I see no verification?
The official website does link it to their YouTube page.


### External links
Good


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed; the lead stuck out as expansive but I made suggestions to help fix that! --K. Peake 10:00, 12 July 2022 (UTC)
I have replied to some of your inquiries and fixed most issues. Best – jona ✉ 15:24, 17 July 2022 (UTC)
 Pass now, I briefly copyedited but slick job from you! --K. Peake 08:00, 19 July 2022 (UTC)