# Talk:Philip Primrose

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:34, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
On hold pending copy-editing. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. Will get to this later today sometime. Connormah (talk) 22:22, 1 June 2011 (UTC)


### Writing and formatting
Some unneeded repetition - in the lead we see "Upon his" x 2, repeat of retirement in 1915, "took up" x 2, etc
Some copy-editing is needed here - for example, what is the "United Kingsdon"?
An embarrassing typo it is. Connormah (talk) 23:59, 1 June 2011 (UTC)
The first para of Early life uses "He" repeatedly, and it's not entirely clear where his father stops and Philip begins
Macleod or Macloed?
Ellipses should not be set with square brackets
Need more hyphens - for example, "three-round salute"


### Accuracy and verifiability
Order Bibliography alphabetically?
Ref 8: legislative assembly is the publisher, not the author
Ref 12: Alberta Online Encyclopedia could be considered either a work or a publisher, but is definitely not an author
Why include publisher location for one bibliography entry and not the other two


### Broad
Some minor repetition of information


### Neutrality
No issues noted


### Stability
No issues noted


### Images
Source link for 1914 NWMP image is dead
Linking to Glenbow Archives files online doesn't always work, I've removed the link. Connormah (talk) 00:02, 2 June 2011 (UTC)

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