# Talk:Rob Sinclair (footballer, born 1989)

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:22, 13 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Avoid single sentence paras such as the one opening the lead.
"the 2007–08 season" put "season" in the pipe and don't pipe to a redirect.  Repeat this for all such instances in the article.
"returning to his parent club in May 2008, Sinclair was released by Luton" probably don't need "by Luton" or else reword perhaps to "was released upon his return to Luton in May 2008" or similar?
"two and a half-year spell." odd hyphenation, I'd probably expect "two-and-a-half-year" if it was me.
"He was left Salisbury" nah.
"and he subsequently" no need for he, and probably no need for subsequently, it seems obvious that would be subsequent...
Do our readers understand "free transfer"?
"signed ... helped ... signed .. helped"  a little repetitive.
("National League South club Hemel Hempstead Town" is that also semi-pro?)
" Under-18 team " no need for capital U.
Link friendly.
"breakthrough" isn't a verb for me, break through.
"On his three-month loan spell," I would say "Of his...
"Sinclair was released by Luton.." perhaps worth noting here that he failed to make a single appearance for the senior team?
"Sinclair joined Salisbury City on " tell me which league this club is in here please.
" three-month loan spell" vs " ten-week loan spell "...
"He made 29 appearances for Salisbury during the 2009–10 season." (without scoring)...
" club Stevenage on 4 June 2010.[16] On joining Stevenage, Sinclair said "signing for Stevenage" Stevenage overload.  Perhaps drop the middle one altogether.
" Having made no first-team " reads odd to me, "Having failed to make any ..."
This "made no apps" appears a few times, so perhaps mix that with "failed to make any" for variety?
"a "dynamic partnership" during" 
"Sinclair made a goalscoring second ... which one?
"tier of Non-League" link?
" at The Raymond McEnhill Stadium on" The shouldn't be caps or in the pipe.
"He was almost ever-present " I don't like that.  He either was or wasn't...
" National League play-off final" don't pipe to a redirect.
"on a free transfer on 25 August 2017.[55] He opted to sign for Oxford City despite interest from National League clubs Barrow and Wrexham.[55] " -> "on a free transfer on 25 August 2017,[55] despite interest from National League clubs Barrow and Wrexham.[55] "
Link FA Cup (!)
Gloucester City is an A.F.C.
"Stuart plays for Walsall[74] whilst Scott plays semi-professionally.[37]" see WP:PRECISELANG this may date quickly, so perhaps think of adding as of in there?
Link PE.  Most of the world call it PT...
That's all on a first review, so on hold it goes. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 16:37, 17 September 2019 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for reviewing the article. All fair points, which I have addressed. Let me know if there is anything else. Cheers. SBFCEdit (talk) 02:15, 18 September 2019 (UTC)
SBFCEdit good stuff, ref 26 currently showing as permanently dead, can we repair/replace?  The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:58, 18 September 2019 (UTC)
All sorted now. Cheers. SBFCEdit (talk) 16:52, 19 September 2019 (UTC)
Great stuff, promoting now. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 17:07, 19 September 2019 (UTC)