# Talk:Shipyard Railway

I'm not certain that the catenary over the bridge was actually dismantled during WW2.  This needs to be verified. Tmangray (talk) 01:07, 16 December 2007 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Shipyard Railway/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Marshelec (talk · contribs) 23:00, 5 December 2022 (UTC)
I plan to commence a review of this article. Marshelec (talk) 23:00, 5 December 2022 (UTC)


### Prose
The prose is to a high standard. I offer the following suggestions for further improvement:


#### The lead
In the lead, add "(an urban mass-transit company)" after Key System in the second sentence.  When I first read the sentence, I initially guessed wrongly that the Key System might be some kind of technology. While the reader can click the link to learn about the Key System, I suggest that this small addition to the text in the lead is worthwhile.
 Done Rephrased.
Relocate the sentence in the lead beginning: "The line operated with ..." to be the 3rd sentence in the paragraph, for better flow.
 Done


#### Route
In the Route section, readers may not be familiar with the use of "jogged" in the second paragraph to describe a change in direction of a route. I recommend some alternative, perhaps: "turned left for two blocks...", or "turned west ...."
 Done
change "curved trestle" to "curved trestle bridge" and add wikilink to Trestle bridge, removing the same link from "trestle" in the History section.
 Done
Also in the second paragraph, I accept that "grade crossing" is common terminology in North America. However, there is an article Level crossing, and I recommend this term is used instead.
 Not done Per WP:ENGVAR
In the third paragraph under Route, replace "jogged" with "turned".
 Done


#### History
Under History, in the third sentence, replace "ran" with "run".
 Done
In the 4th sentence, provide the full expansion of IER, by relocation from the 2nd paragraph.
 Done


#### Rolling stock
In the second paragraph, change "refit" to "refitted"
 Done
In the second paragraph, change "married pairs" to "twin units (also known as married pairs)"
 Not done Per ENGVAR
I will aim to cover other GA review criteria in the next couple of days.
Marshelec (talk) 00:03, 6 December 2022 (UTC)


### Verifiable with no original research
No issues found with references that I was able to check. Online citations are from reliable sources.
No copyright violations identified.


### Broad in its coverage
Good coverage of the topic.


### Neutral
No issues.


### Stable
No issues.


### Illustrated
Images are all relevant, with suitable captions and are tagged with copyright status
This is a Pass. Marshelec (talk) 03:31, 6 December 2022 (UTC)