# Talk:Roy Conacher

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 17:40, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
Been a while since I reviewed a hockey guy, so I'll give this a shot. Wizardman 17:40, 4 January 2014 (UTC)
Here are the issues I found:

"Conacher played his minor hockey with the Toronto Marlboro organization with whom he was a member of Ontario provincial championship winning teams at the bantam and midget age groups." This feels a bit like a run-on to me. Not sure how to reword it, it just sounds off when said aloud.
Fixed?
"for the following two seasons where led the Halifax city league" missing a word
Fixed. Also broke up another run-on sentence.
The couple uses of colons don't seem appropriate; double-check those.
Removed a couple.  Fixed?
Just a couple minor fixes, I'll put on hold and pass when fixed. Wizardman 03:39, 7 January 2014 (UTC)

Done, hopefully!  Appreciate the review! Resolute 04:01, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
Everything checks out here, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 04:36, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

Are you sure Conacher is the first rookie to lead the NHL in goal scoring? Nels Stewart seems like the first guy to do it in 1925-26 with the Montreal Maroons. Heroman26 (talk) 19:27, 4 January 2014 (UTC)

You're right.  I checked back and realized I misinterpreted the source.  Thanks for that! Resolute 19:41, 4 January 2014 (UTC)