# Talk:Siege of Knoxville

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:46, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
I'll look at this one soon. Hog Farm  Talk 23:46, 7 May 2022 (UTC)

I just traded a book about the history of Catholicism in America for Piston's bio of Longstreet; I can look in there to see if there's anything significant if you would like. Hog Farm  Talk 23:52, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
The lead is organized a bit oddly - IMO it would make more sense to discuss the background of Burnside's campaigning before discussing the details of the siege itself.
 Done The lede has been re-ordered.
" and 4,391 troops in the Left Wing" - is this Willcox?
The list of unit strengths (IX Corps, XXIII Corps infantry, cavalry, and Left Wing) is followed by a sentence naming the commanders (Potter, Manson, Shackelford, and Willcox).
"The commander of the 15th South Carolina, Major William M. Gist was killed" - I believe there should be a comma after Gist, although I'm not great with commas so I'll recuse on making the change myself
 Done
"A fieldwork that the Confederates called Fort Loudon was renamed Fort Sanders on November 24" - this could use some elaboration here.  Is Fort Loudon a Union work the Confederates gave the name Fort Loudon to (like the "Fort Hell" and "Fort Damnation" at Petersburg), a Confederate work the Union later captured and renamed, or a work the Confederates built and gave the name Sanders for some reason?
 Done Is that better?
How many of the James rifles were in Fort Huntington Smith?
 Done Added the word "several". Hess did not specify the number of guns. Henshaw's battery had two 3.8-inch James rifles. Sims' battery had an unknown number of those weapons.
Ready for Kingston, pausing for now. Hog Farm  Talk 21:29, 8 May 2022 (UTC)

"However, Wheeler was ultimately thwarted when his troopers ran into Knoxville's infantry defenders on the south bank." - is this the Tennessee?  The infobox map suggests the defenses were instead along the Holston
 Done Add "Tennessee River". Modern maps (including Hess) show the Tennessee River flowing past the center of Knoxville. However, a short distance upstream, the Holston and French Broad Rivers join to form the Tennessee. Poe's map and the infobox map show the Holston River. I added a footnote (1) explaining this.
"By the evening of December 5, Howard's troops reached Louisville while the soldiers of Granger" - recommend making it clearer that this is Louisville, Tennessee, as Louisville, Kentucky is what everyone's going to be thinking for the Tennessee/Kentucky region
 Done
Sourcing is a bit heavy on Hess, but that's understandable and okay for GA because IIRC Hess is the main modern source for this campaign. Hog Farm  Talk 15:32, 9 May 2022 (UTC)