# Talk:ProtoGalaxy

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Reviewer: Niwi3 (talk · contribs) 10:54, 17 April 2013 (UTC)
Hello Neelix, I'll be glad to take this review.


### Issues found
The publisher for ref 4 is not Eurogamer, but GamesIndustry International
Ref 8 lacks author (Mike Gnade)
Could you upload a screenshot of the game to illustrate the gameplay?
The gameplay section needs rewording, but I'll help you with it. Also, you should mention the game genre (side scroller shoot'em up probably?)
In the gameplay section, "ProtoGalaxy was described by Game Interface as a 3D Galaga with side-scrolling gameplay." -- move that to the reception section
In the gameplay section, "Ship upgrades include engines, force fields, a gravitational beam, hull upgrades, missile launchers, turrets, and even minibots that repair the ship throughout missions." -- drop even.
In the gameplay section, "The developers omitted respawning in order to increase the difficulty of the game." -- move that to the development section.
In the reception section, "There are also no checkpoints, a fact that necessitates starting over at the beginning of a level should the player's ship explode." -- Why is this in the reception section? Actually, it seems more like a gameplay mechanic.
Please feel free to leave comments and responses to my comments at any point during the review.--Niwi3 (talk) 10:54, 17 April 2013 (UTC)

Thank you for taking up this nomination. I have corrected the publisher for reference 4, added the author for reference 8, added a screenshot, reworded the "Gameplay" section, removed the sentence beginning "Ship upgrades include," moved the sentence beginning "The developers omitted" to the "Development" section, and clarified why the sentence beginning "There are also" is in the "Reception" section. Please let me know if you have any further concerns. Neelix (talk) 14:43, 17 April 2013 (UTC)
I've done a few tweaks. Please doublecheck my work to make sure I haven't inadvertently added new errors, and feel free to revert anything you disagree with. --Niwi3 (talk) 17:24, 17 April 2013 (UTC)
I corrected the sole grammatical error I found. Thank you for the cleanup. Neelix (talk) 19:20, 17 April 2013 (UTC)
 Pass. Good work. Regards. --Niwi3 (talk) 20:13, 17 April 2013 (UTC)

Lots of the refs are duplicated, some with a little intro text. Why aren't these just consolidated into identical footnotes? As it stands, it needlessly extends the article's length. czar ♔ 20:30, 1 December 2013 (UTC)

It is a common but optional citation style to cluster references in order to avoid interspersing multiple references throughout a single sentence and thereby jarring the text flow. I think this article reads better with the citations clustered, but I can switch the citation style if there is consensus to do so. Neelix (talk) 04:21, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

 Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Video games/Sources#ProtoGalaxy_sources for discussion czar ♔ 20:32, 1 December 2013 (UTC)