# Talk:The Oregon Trail (1985 video game)

I understand that most of the following edits have already been approved in principle, pending my submission of verbatim text that includes the citation markup.
1.  New text appended to existing sentence (intro, 2nd paragraph, 2nd sentence):
Old text:  
and released on the MECC timeshare system in 1975.
New text:
and released on the MECC timeshare system in 1975, followed by similar versions for Apple, Atari, Commodore, and Radio Shack computers (from 1978 to 1984).
2.  Revised text (intro, 3rd paragraph, 1st sentence):
Old text:  
and the most well known entry in the Oregon Trail series, and was released in multiple editions between 1985 and 1993 for several platforms, including DOS and Atari 8-Bit computers.
New text:
and the most well-known entry in the Oregon Trail series.  For five years it was only available as an Apple II product, but an identical version for DOS was released in 1990.  Between 1991 and 1993, MECC released three GUI versions of the game (for Macintosh, DOS, and Windows respectively), thereby allowing people to play the game using a mouse.
3.  Insertion of a new citation (in “GUI version”, 1st paragraph, 1st sentence):
Old text: 
In 1991 through 1993, MECC released an updated version of the game for three different platforms – Macintosh (in monochrome, 1991), DOS (with “Deluxe” added to the title, 1992), and Windows (1993).
New text: 
In 1991 through 1993, MECC released an updated version of the game for three different platforms – Macintosh (in monochrome, 1991), DOS (with “Deluxe” added to the title, 1992), and Windows (1993).
Thank you!
Filbo (talk) 18:28, 21 August 2019 (UTC)


### Reply 22-AUG-2019
  Edit request implemented    Spintendo  23:04, 22 August 2019 (UTC)

I was playing the Deluxe version of the game to kill time as I'm down with a bad cold and encountered a very strange glitch I had never seen before. I took a screenshot and proceeded to try and look it up, but could find no documentation anywhere. Where would be an appropriate place to attempt to document this? The glitch involves a trade deal, someone is trying to purchase the current date from me! O.O
Nokota Silver (talk) 19:19, 17 January 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:The Oregon Trail (1985 video game)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:35, 31 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

Oooh! Good choice, PresN! Panini!🥪 18:25, 1 February 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox and lede
Slightly alter the wikilinks so that the split is "text-based game / by the same name" and not "text-based / game of the same name"
"by the same name" → "of the same name"
"over ten months in 1984 and 1985" → "over a ten-month period from 1984 to 1985."
"it" in it was bought by SoftKey is vague
been described as a cultural landmark by whom?
@GhostRiver: Done. --PresN 02:30, 3 February 2022 (UTC)


### Gameplay
Commas after "Independence, Missouri" and "Williamette Valley, Oregon" per MOS:GEOCOMMA
"characters profession" → "character's profession"
"which correspond" → "which corresponds"
"to start the journey with" → "with which to start the journey"
"If the party reached" → "If the party reaches"
"and they can add an epitaph"


### Development
#### Original text game
"Rawitch was a student teacher for" → "for which Rawitch was a student teacher"
"which schools could connect to" → "to which schools could connect"
"It was a hit" might fall too close to MOS:IDIOM
"Rawitsch was hired by the Minnesota Educational Computing Consortium (MECC), a state-funded organization that developed educational software for the classroom, as an entry-level liaison for local community colleges." → "the Minnesota Educational Computing Consortium (MECC), a state-funded organization that developed educational software for the classroom, hired Rawitsch as an entry-level liaison for local community colleges."
"which schools around Minnesota could connect to" → "to which schools around Minnesota could connect"
missing space in "adaptedThe"
The game is referred to as Oregon only once, I'd write out the whole title since this isn't widely used in the article


#### 1985 game
"from one where" → "from one in which"
"primarily for schools" → "school settings"
"educational aspect should be" → "educational aspect should arise from"
"which resemble the original game"
"instead flipped dead animals upside down" → "flipped animals upside down to indicate their deaths"
"retained adding" → "retained the addition of"


#### Later versions
"had the game's interface changed" → "had altered the game's interface"


### Reception and legacy
1985 version is considered the main version Can we rephrase to reduce repetition of "version"?
"form 1971 on" → "from 1971 on"


### References
Good – the Medium sources are fine as they are published by, you know, the subject matter expert


### General comments
Images are properly licensed and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Copyvio score looks good
Putting on hold to allow nominator to address remaining comments. Please feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 20:33, 3 February 2022 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: All done! I see that I had some problems with prepositions in this one, especially dangling "to"s. Thanks for catching them! --PresN 01:46, 4 February 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for making those changes, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 18:26, 4 February 2022 (UTC)