# Talk:William Grinfield

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 22:31, 21 May 2022 (UTC)
I will pick this one up. Comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 22:31, 21 May 2022 (UTC)

@Zawed: Hi, no rush, just pinging in case this has passed you by. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 10:09, 5 June 2022 (UTC)


### Lead
battle of Lincelles: I think battle can be capitalised here (but not siege as you have correctly done) and also in article body.
Done.
Grinfield continued in command of the 3rd Guards until 1795...: no antecedence for "continued"
Reworded
eighteen days later, aged 58.: if we know his age when he died, then we can pin his dob to 1842–1843 and mention in infobox and elsewhere.
Done.


### Early service
captain and lieutenant-colonel in 1776.: Perhaps "captain and lieutenant-colonel (regimental and army ranks respectively) in 1776."
The different ranks are noted earlier in the same sentence, do you think the repetition is needed?
I have added "respectively" here but delete if you don't like it. This isn't something that I think would justify holding up promotion. Zawed (talk) 10:04, 11 June 2022 (UTC)


### Home service
major-general should be linked on first mention in previous paragraph
Done.
Continuing to command the 3rd Foot Guards,...: as per the lead, it hasn't been stated yet that he was commanding the 3rd Foot Guards, just the 1st Battalion of same.
Reworded to avoid saying that he commanded them. Technically there was a colonel above him who "commanded" the battalion/regiment (I believe there was only one battalion at this point, although it is still described as the "1st Battalion" in source).


### Capture of Saint Lucia and Tobago
640 French soldiers were taken prisoner: numbers shouldn't start a sentence unless written out
Reworded.
Capture of Saint Lucia and Tobago: on 25 June, attacking Tobago on 30 June. suggest "attacking Tobago five days later" to avoid using close usage of dates.
Done.


### Other stuff
A lot of the sources are quite historic; I think they will be acceptable for GA but wouldn't be surprised if there is pushback if this goes to A-Class.
Yep, I initially struggled to find good sources at all. Not an article I'll be taking further, but thought it deserved to at least exist.
Image tags OK
That's about it for me. Zawed (talk) 10:36, 6 June 2022 (UTC)

@Zawed: Hi, thanks for the review. I've responded to your comments above. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:26, 7 June 2022 (UTC)
To wrap things up, I did a spotcheck on the online sources, they look to support what they are used to cite. I am satisfied that this meets the requirements of GA so passing now. Zawed (talk) 10:06, 11 June 2022 (UTC)