# Talk:USS Pennsylvania (BB-38)

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 08:50, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

I have a few comments:

the oa length, beam and draft conversions don't match between the body and infobox
Fixed
the displacement doesn't match between the body and infobox, also say what sort of displacement in the infobox?
Fixed
the infobox says Curtiss turbines, the body says Parsons
Fixed
the power doesn't match between body and infobox, link shp in infobox
Fixed
range and capacity figures don't gel between infobox and body
You'd think I'd have fixed all of these when I rewrote the article ;)
the secondary battery figures don't match between infobox and body 22 vs 14
Fixed
where were the TTs located?
Hmm, Friedman doesn't say
Ah, but Conway's had it
the belt armor figures don't match between infobox and body
Fixed
the turret armor figures don't match between infobox and body
Fixed
on a couple of occasions, I suggest using a colon followed by a narrative list with intermediate semicolons. An example is " a delegation consisting of" but also "during which she stopped in"
Done
there are three links to various versions of Culebra, Puerto Rico. I assume it is the one place, so suggest trimming.
Good catch - the dupelink tool didn't spot that one
"to Puget Sound ofn 21 January"
Fixed
"On 15 June, Admiral Joseph M. Reeves took command of the fleet aboard Pennsylvania", but up to this point, I thought she was only a divisional flagship?
Clarified
CNO is not introduced
Fixed
suggest "the Japanese having evacuated without the awareness of the US forces in the area"→"the Japanese having evacuated without US forces in the area having becoming aware of it." if that is what is meant?
Done
were the contingent of 790 passengers military or civilian?
Military, I'd assume, but DANFS doesn't say who they were
"to provide artillery support to the marines"
Fixed
this may just be AustEng, but up-coming seems a weird hyphenation
Fixed
"four bombs landed closet" close?
Fixed
there is a mention of a Curtiss SC Seahawk, but I haven't seen a mention of onboard aircraft earlier?
For whatever reason, it seems that reconnaissance aircraft tend to be overlooked in many sources - we had the same problem with the British Revenges that you reviewed, as I recall. They're not insignificant pieces of equipment, so I don't know why Conway's, Friedman, Burt for British ships, etc. ignore them.
Breyer, Morison and Smith need a publication location
Added
File:USS Pennsylvania 1925 SLV Green.jpg needs a a US-PD licence
Added
That's me done, just placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67  (click to talk to me) 10:53, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks PM! Parsecboy (talk) 16:32, 16 April 2019 (UTC)
This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by appropriately licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Nice work! Peacemaker67  (click to talk to me) 03:28, 17 April 2019 (UTC)