# Talk:War (Pop Smoke song)

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:35, 27 January 2021 (UTC)

Reasonable for me to take this on, as you have a lot of GANs pending currently! --K. Peake 08:35, 27 January 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Target Victor Victor to Victor Victor Worldwide per MOS:LINK2SECT
Introduce Lil Tjay as a fellow rapper
"of Andre Loblack." → "of Andre Loblack and solely handled production." since the following sentence is too short and can be merged like this
Target digital download to Music download
Target streaming to Streaming media
Wikilink bonus track
"Pop Smoke's second studio mixtape" → "Pop Smoke's second mixtape,"
Remove the exact release date because the release year is in brackets
"Pop Smoke and" → ""War" sees Pop Smoke and"


### Background and composition
"alongside Lil Tjay who" → "alongside Lil Tjay, who"
Wikilink 808Melo
 Not done --K. Peake 05:59, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
Target programming to Programming (music)
Target mastered to Mastering (audio)
"the song while Fabian Marasciullo mixed the song" → "the song, while Fabian Marasciullo handled mixing" with the target
"Thomas McLaren who was" → "Thomas McLaren, who was"
Probably either mention the release was in the United States like the source backs up or add numerous citations to source a various release
 Not done you have not mentioned nor does the source say what you are claiming --K. Peake 05:59, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
"bonus track on Pop Smoke's second studio" → "bonus track on Pop Smoke's second" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
""War" is a" → "Musically, "War" is a"
"Michael Saponara states that" → "Michael Saponara stated that"
Mention that Saponara stated the croaky rhymes are from Pop Smoke and the high-pitched croon is from Lil Tjay; ask if you are confused about how to word this
""high-pitched croon."" → ""high-pitched croon"." per MOS:QUOTE
"He continues, saying" → "He continued, saying"
"them disposed of."" → "them disposed of"."
"comments that the song" → "commented that the song"
Target chorus to Refrain
"and assertive bars."" → "and assertive bars"."
"they come through."" → "they come through"."


### Reception
Target music critics to Music journalism
""stream-worthy single."" → ""stream-worthy single"." per MOS:QUOTE
"the song as "ominous."" → "the song as "ominous"."
"honeyed melodies," and" → "honeyed melodies", and"
"throughout the track."" → "throughout the track"."
"war-ready," while" → "war-ready", while"
"an explosive combination."" → "an explosive combination"."
The NME quote does not have a beginning for the speech marks
"a frenzied combination."" → "a frenzied combination"."


### Music video
"in black and white and features" → "in black and white, with it featuring"
Mention the website Torsten Ingvaldsen is from
""lightly edited," and commented that the visual's" → ""lightly edited", and commented that its" per MOS:QUOTE
 Partly done change the visual's to its --K. Peake 05:59, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
"mark transitions throughout."" → "mark transitions throughout"."
"was "sweet and simple."" → "is "sweet and simple"."
 Partly done change was to is --K. Peake 05:59, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
"to the masses."" → "to the masses"."


### Credits and personnel
Change writer to songwriter
programming should be last under Andre Loblack's credits


### Charts
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks great at 14.5%!
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Wikilink Apple Music on ref 2


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed and remember what I told you after the last review! --K. Peake 09:49, 27 January 2021 (UTC)
Kyle Peake All the issues should be addressed. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 23:10, 28 January 2021 (UTC)
The Ultimate Boss Thank you for having a go, I have pointed out above where things remain unaddressed. --K. Peake 05:59, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
The Ultimate Boss I can you have been active but not completed the fixes yet... please try to soon. --K. Peake 07:50, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
The Ultimate Boss  Pass and I added the three remaining changes for you since they were only minor, but I advise you in the future to not ignore when reviewers mention you for only a few fixes because it is common practice to respond in scenarios like these where it's on your part to do so, especially when easy. --K. Peake 06:40, 30 January 2021 (UTC)