# Talk:Typhoon Bess (1974)

Sorry to the creator, but a lot more information is needed if this article is to stay. Hurricanehink 14:19, 20 February 2006 (UTC)

This article was on the Request/Suggestion List; it was voted worthy of an article (you voted for this one, by the way) so I am fulfilling that wish for such an article. I understand there isn't a lot of info yet; I am working on it. If you can find more info for this article, be my guest. (I know the responsibility is on me to find it, however.) -- Sarsaparilla39 10:52, 28 February 2006 (UTC)
Oh, forgot about that list! :) Well, you added enough for this to stay, though it still needs work. What you can do is make a longer intro, more storm history, and try and find Hainan or China impact (if possible). Hurricanehink 12:43, 28 February 2006 (UTC)
Hainan Island and Vietnam impacts will be a lot easier said than done; my main source was the TCR and it only elaborated on Luzon. I've put this on Jdorje's storm path list, though it's also on his talk page as he may not see it. Thanks for your comments. :D -- Sarsaparilla39 09:10, 3 March 2006 (UTC)

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Reviewer: TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contribs) 01:11, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
Hi, guy-that-never-vists-us-on-chat-anymore. I'll be reviewing this article. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:11, 4 May 2013 (UTC)

"Typhoon Bess (also known as Typhoon Susang in the Philippines) was responsible for the disappearance of a United States Air Force weather reconnaissance aircraft." - This is an interesting fact, but is it really the highlight of the storm?
I saw this as the most interesting aspect of the storm and therefore the best option for an opening sentence. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"Developing out of a poorly organized system on October 8 to the east of the Philippines, Bess initially featured two centers of circulation. Initially, the southern low was monitored; however, a low to the north soon became the dominant center." - Redundancy with the word "initially".
Removed the first usage Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"Tracking general west-northwestward, the storm gradually intensified." - General should be generally. Since it's used, though, is gradually needed? Seems to make the short sentence wordy.
It's to account for the northwest motion shown since the overall movement was generally west-northwestward :P Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"The storm struck northern Luzon on October 11 as a minimal typhoon and briefly weakened once onshore." - Storm to system? cyclone? "Storm" is used in the preceding sentence which makes it a bit redundant.
Reworded Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"On October 6, 1974, the Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC) began monitoring a tropical disturbance several hundred miles southeast of Guam." - (JTWC) should be on the outside of the wikilink.
I've been told to put in inside the wikilink lately per MOS...you all need to make up your minds. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"Early on October 9, an aircraft reconnaissance mission into the newly named Bess revealed that a new dominant center of circulation had developed to the north of the original low." - Newly and new makes new redundancy.
Removed the first usage Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"Maintaining a west-northwesterly track, favorable outflow, especially to the southwest, allowed Bess to strengthen." - You're the college student and I'm the high school student, but I thought strengthening wasn't a result of favorable outflow. I thought the outflow was a result of a favorable environment, which tends to allow a cyclone to strengthen.
I derped here... Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"Due to the cyclone's proximity to the country, the Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration also monitored the storm and assigned it with the local name Susang." - No abbreviation ([PAGASA])?!
No need for the abbreviation since it's only used once. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"Much of the peninsula received 130 to 150 mm (5 to 6 in) of rain, with a 24 hour maxima of 782.3 mm (30.8 in) reported in Baguio." - Seems like a big jump to use such simple wording. Suggestion, maybe: "While much of the peninsula received 130 to 150 mm (5 to 6 in) of rain, a 24 hour maxima of 782.3 mm (30.8 in) was recorded in Baguio [as a result of...?!]."
Tweaked. No further explanation on the total (referring to that as a result of bit). Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"Sea water leaked into the city's underground sewage system and caused minor flooding in the areas western district." - Area's.
Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
"However, in 1979, the list of typhoon names was changed to incorporate male names and Bess re-introduced to the roster." - Missing a "was" somewhere in there?
Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
That's all. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:11, 4 May 2013 (UTC)

I believe I got everything. Thanks for the review TA! Cyclonebiskit (talk) 20:21, 4 May 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for addressing the above comments. Auree made a minor c/e to get rid of some of the jargon used; the article should be in good shape to be passed now. Cheers, guy-that-was-on-chat-for-two-days-and-then-left-again. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 23:33, 5 May 2013 (UTC)