# Talk:Tiahni Adamson

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Nominator: Pangalau (talk · contribs) 06:15, 6 August 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: IngeniousPachyderm (talk · contribs) 23:10, 7 September 2025 (UTC)

This looks like an interesting article. I will start a full review soon. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 23:10, 7 September 2025 (UTC)

Hello, I'm a more experienced reviewer here to oversee the review and help out where/if needed. Just two tips that I have noticed new reviewers sometimes struggle with:
It's a good idea to structure your review based on the criteria. Different reviewers do this in different ways. Some use the templates linked in the "GA toolbox" on the right, others just create section headings based on the criteria. I personally think the clearest way to do it is with this (feel free to copy+paste) or a similar structure, but you are free to use if you would like.
It's a good idea to keep track of how you evaluated the criteria as you go along, even if you find no issues. It means others can see you are checking everything, and allows you to keep track of the review better. For example, when evaluating the scope/broadness (criterion 3), you might write "The structure appears to follow the same structure as other GA and FA articles on this topic. I see no major omitted areas."
IAWW (talk) 22:29, 5 September 2025 (UTC)
Hey @IngeniousPachyderm, I'm looking over your comments and review is very clear and the comments are mostly all relevant. It is very good for a first review. Well done for picking up on BLPSTYLE issues, and I think this should be further pushed for. The most egregious example currently in the article is:
As the lead community engagement officer, Adamson aims to introduce Indigenous knowledge into climate solutions and consults with communities to ensure their voices are heard: This tone is very promotional and reads like a CV. Additionally it is sourced mostly to the company she works for. This is definitely not appropriate for a neutral encyclopedia.
There are other promotional tone issues remaining in the article though which I'm sure you can identify. I have a few other less important comments to clear some things up and give you some small improvements for the future:
I wouldn't worry about the result of GPTZero. As far as I can see it is not really relevant at all. I just raised concerns about including that tool in the toolbox here because I think it does more harm than good. You can also ignore "citation bot" in the future.
You have to sign your comments for pings to be transmitted. I didn't receive the ping below because of that.
Try to justify all your comments somewhat. E.g. some nominators would push back on comments like "I would remove "actively" from this line in the first paragraph" with no justification.
Archiving links is not required for GA, so it should be included in "suggestions"
IAWW (talk) 14:34, 14 September 2025 (UTC)
Hi @It is a wonderful world,
Thank you for the feedback! I am re-reading the changes made now and agree on the tone. It's good to know about GPTZero's issues, I won't rely on it. Additionally I will try to justify all comments going forward and be sure to including archiving as a suggestion in the future.
Hopefully you get this ping!
IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:07, 14 September 2025 (UTC)
Weirdly enough I didn't get that ping. Could you try again with a signature on the same line as the ping and see if that works? I really hope there isn't something wrong because it would be such a pain to fix. IAWW (talk) 19:22, 14 September 2025 (UTC)
One more try here. I'm doing the thing where I add 4 tildes "~" at the end. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 22:59, 14 September 2025 (UTC)

Opening_comments:

Please keep in mind that this is my first Good Article review. @It is a wonderful world has volunteered to be my mentor in this review.
The article is currently assessed as a B-class article.
Tools:

Ran GPTZero, I'm not too sure how this tool works, but:
When I copy and paste each paragraph separately into GPTZero, it is "highly confident" that this article was 100% AI generated.
It says almost the entirely of the article was written by an AI
This may perhaps be because of the use of Em dashes throughout the article?
When I copy and paste the entire article (including Infobox, table of contents, and references) GPTZero becomes "highly confident" that it is written by a human. Not sure how reliable this tool is
Authorship is 58.9% from the nominator with contributions from 8 other editors
Ran CitationBot, (very) slightly modified the title of 1 reference's title


### Prose (Criteria 1a, 1b, 4)
### General Comments
The article seems a little short, at 755 words
As per MOS:TIES, maybe the article should be in Australian English and an article should be added to the Talk Page.
Some sentences may need to be re-written to comply with WP:BLPSTYLE. Especially regarding "passionate tone" in the below examples:
"Adamson remains dedicated to healing and protecting Country, advocating for environmental justice, and empowering First Nations peoples through her work"
"Her involvement with the Uluru Statement is grounded in her belief that science and politics are deeply interconnected."
Changes made. Pangalau (talk) 05:25, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
Thank you. I do have a couple more comments about Tone that are brought up in the appropriate sections. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)


#### Lead
The lead is rather short, as per MOS:LEADLENGTH it should maybe have another paragraph summarizing more of the article.
Maybe "wildlife conservation biologist" should be Wikilinked to Conservation biology?
"Indigenous Australians" and "First Nations" both link to same page, second link should be removed.
The citations used in the lead aren't necessary as the information is referenced in the body. Please remove these citations.
Done! Pangalau (talk) 13:48, 11 September 2025 (UTC)
Looks good overall! Thank you for expanding the lead. I do agree with IAWW's comments about the tone for BLP. I think the line "Adamson is famous for her activism" should be changed to reflect the tone, perhaps to something such as "Adamson has been recognized for her activism"? IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)
Done! Pangalau (talk) 02:33, 15 September 2025 (UTC)
Thanks! Sorry a couple more changes to the lead I missed last time.
"voyage during 2019-20" should be changed to "2019-2020" just to avoid ambiguity.
I think "bringing together her campaigning with the intersection of science..." should be reworded to something like "bringing her campaigning to the intersection of science..." to make the statement a bit more clear. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 04:59, 15 September 2025 (UTC)
All good, the changes are done! Pangalau (talk) 06:47, 15 September 2025 (UTC)


#### Early life and education
Can the Early Life section be expanded? It goes from childhood to university rather quickly.
It seems to be a bit short. It's missing things like Tianhi's birthplace which I was able to find.
Maybe add wikilink for "veterinary medicine"
Done. I'm still having trouble finding her exact date and place of birth, please share the link if you come across it, thanks! Pangalau (talk) 02:51, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
The expansion looks good, thank you. And sorry, I should've provided the source for birthplace. Tiahni says she was born in Adelaide at timestamp 3:49 in [this video]
Minor note but please add a wikilink to "Philippines" in the second paragraph here. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)
Done! Pangalau (talk) 02:38, 15 September 2025 (UTC)


#### Career
I would removed "has" from the first line
Changing "Adamson has worked" to "Adamson worked"
First instance of "CSIRO" should have the whole name of the organization in text with the acronym followed in parentheses.
Similar for "PIRSA"
A wikilink should also be added to "Primary Industries and Regions SA" (if that is the organization being referenced)
I would remove "actively" from this line in the first paragraph
Changing "where she actively fostered stronger connections between government agencies and First Nations communities." to "where she fostered stronger connections between government agencies and First Nations communities."
Why is "Country" capitalized? I'm not familiar with Australian English, but it seems like a lot of people refer to "Country" as a proper noun. I may just be ignorant on this subject.
Please add Wikilinks for:
"methane emissions from livestock"
"aquaculture"
"Asparagopsis"
"She sees the Voice as a vital step toward healing for Australia's First Nations people—its first scientists—and believes it will benefit both Indigenous communities and the wider Australian public"
What "Voice"? Why is it capitalized?
"—its first scientists—" reads awkwardly, perhaps it can be reworded to something like ",who she views as the land's first scientists," (if that is what she claims).
Otherwise it reads like the article is claiming that the first scientists in Australia were the Indigenous people as a fact. Not saying they weren't, but I think it could be viewed as non-neutral.
I’ve made major edits to this section to refocus it on Tiahni Adamson. Pangalau (talk) 03:34, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
Changes look good overall but I agree with IAWW about the tone of the second paragraph. Specifically the sentence "As the lead community engagement officer, Adamson aims to introduce Indigenous knowledge into climate solutions and consults with communities to ensure their voices are heard" reads as promotional and non-neutral and should be re-worded as per their comments. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)
Done! Pangalau (talk) 02:39, 15 September 2025 (UTC)
Looks good, a couple more things I missed last time.
PIRSA shouldn't be wikilinked here since it was linked to in the lead.
Maybe add a wikilink to "intersectionality" to help readers who may not be familiar with the term. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 05:06, 15 September 2025 (UTC)
I’ve updated it. Pangalau (talk) 06:48, 15 September 2025 (UTC)


#### Recognitions and awards
I would remove "widely" from the first sentence.
Changing from "Adamson has been widely featured" to "Adamson has been featured"
"Adamson has been widely featured in both print and radio media, with interviews and coverage highlighting her achievements—including being named South Australia’s Young Australian of the Year and her nomination for the national Young Australian of the Year title"
I would split this into two sentences and remove the em dash, as per below:
"Adamson has been widely featured in both print and radio media, with interviews and coverage highlighting her achievements. In 2024 she was nominated for the title of national Young Australian of the Year, and was awarded the title of South Australia’s Young Australian of the Year."
Instead of simply listing the awards she received, I think prose should be used. It would be nice to expand the section and provide background into the awards and why she won them, where possible. See WP:Embed
The "2018 – CSIRO Tertiary Education STEM awards finalist." award is missing a citation.
I’ve converted the bullet points into paragraphs and added sources with archive links for all awards. Pangalau (talk) 05:11, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
These changes look fantastic, thank you! IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)


### Sources
#### Health/formatting (Criterion 2a)
All references are listed and formatted properly.
Archived links are present for most resources used. External Links Tool found 10 URLs lacking archive links.
I would suggest adding "url-status=live" to references where the website is still accessible without the IA. These websites usually load faster than IA. I don't think this is necessary though.
Please add archive links for the below references:
[9] University of Adelaide
[11] 3KND
[12] InDaily
[13] CityMag
[14] CH4 Global
[17] The Canberra Times
[19] University of Adelaide - should also include date posted and author listed
[20] SA Environment Awards
[21] CSIROpedia
Provided date and author to the University of Adelaide reference. Pangalau (talk) 05:13, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
Great, thank you. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)


#### Reliability (Criterion 2b) clock
Most references seem reliable, Australian news websites, non-profits, and university websites.
Citations are placed appropriately.


#### Spot check (Criteria 2b, 2c, 2d)
1 The article lists her as two different ages, it seems.
First, "Tiahni Adamson, 26 of Seaford Meadows..."
Second, "Tiahni Jade Adamson 25 of Glenelg..."
There is no date provided for the article. The article was archived on February 11, 2025.
For these reasons I don't think this article is an appropriate source for Adamson's age / year born.
The InDaily article used later may be a better source. It was published June 10 2023 and writes "The 28-year-old"
2 Confirms everything except for the claim that she "developed a strong passion for sustainability from an early age."
3 Confirmed
5 I'm not sure if this is a reliable source. Hughes PR seems to be a PR company.
6 Confirmed
7 I think you should add a timestamp to this resource to make it easier to show when the claim is made.
8 Confirmed
9 Confirmed
11 Confirmed
12 Confirmed
13 Confirmed
19 Confirmed
The Hughes PR source has been removed, and a timestamp has been included. Pangalau (talk) 05:24, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
Thank you. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)


### Copyvio (Criterion 2d)
Earwig says "Violation unlikely" at 30.6% similarity. The highest matches from CityMag, Canberra Times, and The University of Adelaide; the overlap is mostly proper nouns and direct quotes that are cited.


### Scope (Criteria 3a, 3b)
I think the article has room to be expanded.
Particularly, her Career section should be expanded to include more details of the work she's done to deserve recognition and awards.
Although information is scarce, I have expanded this section as thoroughly as possible based on my research. Pangalau (talk) 05:25, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
This section looks good aside from the comments made above that IAWW brought up about tone. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:29, 14 September 2025 (UTC)


### Stable (Criterion 5)
No evidence of edit wars.


### Media
The article is well illustrated


#### Tags (Criterion 6a)
Both images used have appropriate copyright tags.


#### Captions (Criterion 6b)
Both images are relevant and have appropriate captions.
For the second image, I think the caption should be changed from "Tiahni speaks at..." to "Adamson speaks at..."
The rest of the article mostly uses her last name when referring, and the first image is also captioned "Adamson in 2025".


### Suggestions (not needed for GA promotion)
Although not a GA criteria, suggest adding ALT text to the images for accessibility.
Thank you for the interesting article. Please take a look at my above comments and ping me when you would like me to take another look. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 21:26, 9 September 2025 (UTC)

@IngeniousPachyderm: I have made changes to the article in accordance with your recommendations. Pangalau (talk) 05:26, 12 September 2025 (UTC)
@Pangalau Thank you! I've reviewed your changes and made notes above. Please review them when you can.
IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 17:30, 14 September 2025 (UTC)
@IngeniousPachyderm: Thank you for your review; the changes have been made once again. Pangalau (talk) 02:40, 15 September 2025 (UTC)
@IngeniousPachyderm: Done! Let me know if anything else needs fixing. Pangalau (talk) 06:49, 15 September 2025 (UTC)
Great, looks good! I don't see any other issues, but I'm going to ping @IAWW for a second opinion / to see if I missed anything, since it's my first GA review. Thank you. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 15:49, 15 September 2025 (UTC)
Pinging User:It is a wonderful world again since I think I did it wrong last time, sorry! IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 03:53, 16 September 2025 (UTC)
Thanks @IngeniousPachyderm, I actually got both pings which is a good sign! I'm reading through the article and don't see too much to prevent this reaching GA. Just a couple of points:
Just a note to be careful with non-profit sources, they can have PoV issues.
She has described the integration of indigenous knowledge into policy and leadership as being essential: This isn't supported by the source cited.
aligning her activism with the intersectionality of science, politics, and Indigenous rights: Presenting in this way is a bit of original research. "intersectionality" is the sort of word you don't want to use unless it's used by the source itself or an extremely accurate reflection of the source. The tone of this sentence is also needlessly abstract. It reads like generative AI. Note this wording is also used in the lead.
Adamson has spoken about the importance of spending time with aboriginal elders: The way this sentence is structured implies that it is fact that spending time with elders is important, when it is just her opinion. "Adamson believes that..." or "Adamson spends time..." would fix this.
IAWW (talk) 08:13, 17 September 2025 (UTC)
Thank you for pointing those out. User:Pangalau please see the above comments from @IAWW. IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 15:04, 17 September 2025 (UTC) IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 15:04, 17 September 2025 (UTC)
@IngeniousPachyderm: I have made the recommended changes. Pangalau (talk) 15:32, 17 September 2025 (UTC)
 Pass Thank you for your work and patience with me during my first GA Review. Nice work! IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 23:25, 18 September 2025 (UTC)
Nice work everyone! IAWW (talk) 07:12, 19 September 2025 (UTC)