# Talk:Stephen Weir

"The 46th Division supervised the disarmament of guerrilla forces in Greece, work which was personally recognised with Weir receiving the Greek Cross of Valour." How about rewording this sentence to read "The 46th Division [obeyed orders to intervene on the side of the Greek fascists by attacking the Communist guerrilla forces] supervised the disarmament of guerrilla forces in Greece, work which was personally recognised with Weir receiving the Greek Cross of Valour."?Keith-264 (talk) 09:18, 29 December 2013 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Stephen Weir/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Kges1901 (talk · contribs) 23:26, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Kges1901 (talk) 23:26, 2 September 2019 (UTC)
In the lead,

If cropped, this photo would be a better infobox image because it shows his face in detail
and in the absence of its nominal commanding officer Major General Bernard Freyberg led the division for a period in 1944 add commas around 'Major General Bernard Freyberg'
Two consecutive 'he retired' sentences at the end, not sure the age he died at is notable enough for the lead
In the body,

Note that he was born Cyril Ettrick Weir in early life
6th Mounted Rifles seem like they are the same unit as the 6th (Manawatu) Mounted Rifles
 In 1931, and now a lieutenant, - unnecessary and
link 1931 Hawke's Bay earthquake for the earthquake
Note Minqar Qaim was during the Battle of Mersa Matruh
Suggest including at least one of the unused images in the commons cat in the WWII section
Mention when Weir became acting GOC of the 2nd New Zealand Division
which had been abandoned by the Germans and leaving left- and right-wing Greek groups struggling for control of the country --> suggest contested by left- and right-wing Greek guerrillas after its abandonment by the Germans
The date he formally changed his name is noted but not the gender of his children or the name of his wife?
the couple's --> their
Generals.dk is not necessary as an ext link because nothing there isn't in the article
As a general suggestion, if you're going to take this to ACR or higher, the article is relatively short at 12.3 kb, so it should be expanded with details from secondary sources, for example [1] and the official history of the 2nd NZ Artillery Kges1901 (talk) 00:16, 3 September 2019 (UTC)
Passing - All comments addressed. Kges1901 (talk) 00:08, 6 September 2019 (UTC)