# Talk:Régiment Royal-Louis

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:03, 18 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Lead is a little brief, could double it up.
"the South of France" Southern France.
"and unhuman behaviour" no need to link, and this has tone issues.
" Insurrection of 31 May–2 June." spaced en-dash.
"lead to country" led to
"important Naval Base in" why in caps?
"the Allies" who?
"name of King Louis XVII. The" overlinked.
"French drills and said disciplinary system" link drill and not sure what the "said" disciplinary system was.
"C. T. Atkinson describes" who is/was he?
"as "...the" per MOS, a non-breaking space after the ellipsis here.
"on 1 October" non-breaking space between day and month, on my screen the sentence breaks after the "1".
"anti-republican" capital R for consistency here?
"under Royal Navy Captain George Elphinstone." sea of blue (three consecutive links).
"The counterattack was" link this first time, and be consistent with hyphenation.
"de Boisgelin had" when starting a sentence, it's usual to go with De...
"Corsica and Disbandment" disbandment without the capital D.
"ships Pompée and Puissant, which" + "HMS Terrible" ship names are italicised.
"which lead to" led
"in London, Great Britain" no need to link London.
And we'd normally place it in England.
"Elliot, 4th Baronet tried" comma after Baronet.
"Hampshire about" comma after Hampshire.
"of a White coat" white
Ref 6 SHOUTING
Ref 7 needs spaced en-dash, not hyphen.
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:20, 23 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man completed, check my sandbox for my comment. J-Man11 (talk) 02:22, 26 September 2021 (UTC)
Please keep review comments/responses on this page.  The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:13, 27 September 2021 (UTC)
Lead is a little brief, could double it up.
"the South of France" Southern France.
"and unhuman behaviour" no need to link, and this has tone issues.
" Insurrection of 31 May–2 June." spaced en-dash.
"lead to country" led to
"important Naval Base in" why in caps?
"the Allies" who?
"name of King Louis XVII. The" overlinked.
"French drills and said disciplinary system" link drill and not sure what the "said" disciplinary system was.
"C. T. Atkinson describes" who is/was he?
"as "...the" per MOS, a non-breaking space after the ellipsis here.
"on 1 October" non-breaking space between day and month, on my screen the sentence breaks after the "1".
Need further explanation on what needs to be changed?
"anti-republican" capital R for consistency here?
"under Royal Navy Captain George Elphinstone." sea of blue (three consecutive links).
"The counterattack was" link this first time, and be consistent with hyphenation.
"de Boisgelin had" when starting a sentence, it's usual to go with De...
"Corsica and Disbandment" disbandment without the capital D.
"ships Pompée and Puissant, which" + "HMS Terrible" ship names are italicised.
"which lead to" led
"in London, Great Britain" no need to link London.
And we'd normally place it in England.
"Elliot, 4th Baronet tried" comma after Baronet.
"Hampshire about" comma after Hampshire.
"of a White coat" white
Ref 6 SHOUTING
Ref 7 needs spaced en-dash, not hyphen.
All completed, check comment please J-Man11 (talk) 12:55, 27 September 2021 (UTC)