# Talk:The Passenger (Boschwitz novel)

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:10, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Lead is almost as long as the rest of the article, needs to be trimmed to one medium size para or two short ones.
Link pogrom.
When you revise the lead, pay head to WP:LEADCITE which says as long as the material in the lead is in the main body, it can all be cited there, with a couple of exceptions that don't look likely to apply here.
"released in Germany in 1938" the same year.
There's definitely material in the lead which isn't even in the main body, so that needs fixing.
"MV Abosso" -> "MV Abosso"
"more than 20 languages" unref.
The plot could be much longer, MOS:PLOT offers guidance in this regard.  What were the "journeys"?  And did he escape?  Etc.
"the Sunday Times" the is part of the title of the newspaper.
"Writing for The Sunday Times" it's then overlinked.
"the New York Times" the is part of the title of the newspaper.
Ref 6 -> the should be The
Ref 8 -> The Wall Street Journal.
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:48, 6 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thank you for taking the time to review this article! I have made the changes you suggested; I hope the article is better now. Any more help you could give would be greatly appreciated. –Bangalamania (talk) 14:02, 9 September 2021 (UTC)
Golan1911 (talk) 17:11, 9 September 2021 (UTC)The BBC article mentions that the book was translated into more than 20 languages in 2021, the year of it's release

@Golan1911: Thanks; I've put that back in the lead. –Bangalamania (talk) 01:27, 10 September 2021 (UTC)
Now you have another citation in the lead and material there which should be mentioned in the main article (and ref'd there).  Could you adjust that?  The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 09:37, 12 September 2021 (UTC)
Golan1911 (talk) 22:33, 13 September 2021 (UTC)Now added to the main body of the article, with source from the BBC

"The book, written by Boschwitz in the weeks after Kristallnacht, was initially released in Germany in the same year." Really? A book about the persecution of Jews in Nazi Germany was published in totalitarian Nazi Germany?  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 84.158.231.241 (talk) 16:12, 5 December 2021 (UTC)