# Talk:Personal (Men of Vizion album)

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Reviewer: Hahc21 (talk · contribs) 06:28, 5 January 2013 (UTC)


### Review
Lead
"with some noting similarities" with some isa bit too vague, I guess that it's the wording, tweak it a bit.
Release
"Originally set to be released on May 14, 1996, Personal was released" redundancy of "released"
I see that "weeks" is used repetitively, try to switch some of the to "issue". Example: "to re-enter at the same position for the week ending on July 20." --> "to re-enter at the same position on the chart issued on July 20."
"being moving back"?
"exited" is used too much.
"tying in with the song's lyric play on reversed gender roles" what does this exactly mean?
Critical
Try to avoid farmquotting
Tracklisting
Why not using the template? (it is not mandatory ofc)
Personnel and Credits and personnel
Why two different sections?
References
All good here.
— ΛΧΣ21 06:37, 5 January 2013 (UTC)

I believe I've fixed all the issues brought forth. As for the track listing, I don't own the album, and I couldn't find scans online for the credits, so I just left it as is. I will, however, put it into the template later.  — Statυs (talk, contribs) 06:57, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
Fair enough. Passing. — ΛΧΣ21 07:04, 5 January 2013 (UTC)