# Talk:The Life and Death of 9413: a Hollywood Extra

This review is transcluded from Talk:The Life and Death of 9413: a Hollywood Extra/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 04:27, 4 March 2016 (UTC)

I am about to start the review, full disclosure I am aWiki Cup and a GA Cup participant. If anyone would like to reciprocate I have my own GAN (Mexican National Trios Championship) needing a review and a Feature Article (CMLL World Heavyweight Championship) and Feature List (Mexican National Light Heavyweight Championship) candidates in need of input. Not that it's a factor in my GA review. I usually provide my feedback in portions over a day or so, so don't be surprised if I keep popping in with stuff for a while.  MPJ-US  04:27, 4 March 2016 (UTC)


### GA Toolbox
The GA tools provided usually provide a good place to start, so let's hit all those first.

Peer Review
Per Wikipedia:Manual of Style (numbers), there should be a non-breaking space -   between a number and the unit of measurement. For example, instead of 35 mm, use 35 mm, which when you are editing the page, should look like: 35 mm.
It is indicating that there may be weasel words in the article, as I review the article I will take a closer look at these.
Copyright violations tool
Reports as "Unlikely" Y
Disambiguation Links
Y no problems

External links
Y no problems
We're off to a promising start.


### Sources
All look good, reliable and correctly formatted. I do have a question since I am not familiar with the movie article standards, is it normal and acceptable to not source the plot section ?  MPJ-US  16:02, 4 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for doing the review! Yes, per WP:FILMPLOT: "Since films are primary sources in their articles, basic descriptions of their plots are acceptable without reference to an outside source." — Hunter Kahn 02:31, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
I thought that might be the case, thank you for confirming. I will be continuing the review now then.


### Images
Appears to all have the appropriate licenses and are all free due to age and copyright rules. Y


### General Review
"Finally he dies" - comma after "finally" I believe
Done.
Is camerawork one word?
I believe it is, actually.
"at failing to achieve theirs dreams" = "their dreams"
Oops. LOL Fixed.
"shot in 35 mm film" - not sure if this is a common way to phrase it but I would have thought it would be "on 35 mm film"?
I think you're right. Changed.
"45 sets were build in" - use the word "built"
Oops again. LOL Changed.
"into squares, while Vorkapić" - does not need the comma
I've removed the comma.
"dehuminazation" should be "dehumanization"
Fixed it.
"Specators" should be "Spectators"
Changed it.
"the expressionistic manner" = "an expressionistic manner"?
Although your version is grammatically correct, the actual quote uses 'the expressionistic manner' so I think we have to stick with that.
If the quote uses it then it's not a problem.  MPJ-US  11:50, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
"eight musicians, and was" does not need the comma
Removed it.
That's all I got, which is the least amount of issues I've found during a GA review so far. Great job it's 99% there already. I am going to put this on hold for 7 days so you have time to fix it.  MPJ-US  11:03, 5 March 2016 (UTC)
Thanks very much for the review! — Hunter Kahn 03:02, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
Looks like everything I pointed out has been improved upon, I will do one more read through to ensure nothing else needs to be addressed. Great work so far.  MPJ-US  11:50, 8 March 2016 (UTC)
@Hunter Kahn: - After another read through I am satisfied that this meets the GA criteria. passed really good work, congratuations.  MPJ-US  12:19, 8 March 2016 (UTC)

File:The Life and Death of 9413 A Hollywood Extra title card.jpg
File:The Life and Death of 9413 a Hollywood Extra - Mask.jpg
File:The Life and Death of 9413 a Hollywood Extra - Jules Raucourt.jpg
File:The Life and Death of 9413 a Hollywood Extra - Hollywood set.jpg
File:The Life and Death of 9413 a Hollywood Extra - Heaven set.jpg
File:The Life and Death of 9413 a Hollywood Extra - Audience.jpg
The description page of all 6 files states that the film is in the public domain. Is it possible to move the files to Commons or it isn't?
190.235.229.100 (talk) 20:48, 22 October 2017 (UTC)

This single sentence exists within the article, along with a single reference, but there's no further explanation as to what is missing (or different) in extant copies. On the other hand, there's an earlier reference in the article to the length of the film, stating "...the final film was edited to a one-reel length of 1,200 feet...", and when using the film footage calculator (https://www.scenesavers.com/content/show/film-footage-calculator), 1200 feet of 35mm film corresponds to a running time of 13 minutes 20 seconds, which is more or less the exact duration of my copy (beginning at 1:02:19 and ending at 1:15:40 on Kino's Silent Avant-Garde" Blu-Ray, running at 24FPS for a total duration of 13 minutes 21 seconds). Can someone clarify which piece of information is correct/incorrect? 65.99.105.91 (talk) 05:09, 29 January 2024 (UTC)

I went ahead and added a 'disputed' tag to this sentence. I think this is fair as a short-term solution because even the embedded copy of the film on this Wiki page runs for 13:25, which (as noted above) roughly corresponds to the stated length of 1200 feet of 35mm film running at 24FPS. However, there are other problems that need to be considered and cleaned-up, IMO:
1) the opening side-bar lists the length as 11 minutes (which, again, doesn't correspond to the included video). This is an additional issue, because silent films weren't necessarily projected at (or even meant to be projected at) 24FPS, so rather than listing a running time at all, maybe the stated length should be standardized by simply referring to the physical length of the film (1200 feet, if the citation is correct) OR referring to both (perhaps saying something like "1200 feet, with a duration of 13:20 when shown at 24FPS).
2) Even with that aside, there should either be further clarification as to whether the 1200 foot figure is correct (as stated above, I personally have no reason to argue against it, but...) OR, if footage is missing, exactly *what* is missing. Simply put, as written in the current article, these three passages all contradict one another, and the only one which has actual corroboration elsewhere in the article (though, admittedly, this does verge on 'original research' to state such) is the one regarding the physical length of 1200 feet.
My personal thought would be that, if the cited source saying the extant film is incomplete *is* actually correct, it would be nice if there were a second source to corroborate that fact (in particular by explaining what is missing and, if possible, giving the intended physical length of the film, i.e. something like "the film was originally 1500 feet, but existing prints are 1200 feet"). If it isn't correct, it would be nice to see all of the lengths standardized (and the statement removed, of course). 65.99.105.91 (talk) 05:27, 8 March 2024 (UTC)

In the current article, the following passage exists:
A Hollywood Extra also touches on the mistreatment of women. Although the actors wear masks—symbolizing their ability to act—the female extra #13 does not; she is expected to simply obey the (male) filmmakers, and her only role is as an object for men to look at. Her success in this simple role, contrasted with the protagonist's inability to succeed despite hard work, reveals how differently the film industry views male and female actors.A Hollywood Extra also touches on the mistreatment of women. Although the actors wear masks—symbolizing their ability to act—the female extra #13 does not; she is expected to simply obey the (male) filmmakers, and her only role is as an object for men to look at. Her success in this simple role, contrasted with the protagonist's inability to succeed despite hard work, reveals how differently the film industry views male and female actors.
Now, having seen the film several times, I personally think that it would be more appropriate to refer to 13's experiences as type-casting, rather than 'mistreatment' (I think it is also worth considering that 13 is one of the characters who mocks 9413's death), but that's my point: while sourced, this is POV writing. Granted, I realize that this is in the segment of the article where 'themes' of the film are analyzed, so POV writing (IMO) is useful and fine for such an application (even if someone is apt to disagree), but wouldn't it be more appropriate to directly quote the referenced text (and more clearly show that it is POV writing), rather than paraphrasing and giving a reference (which, at least to me, comes off as making it seem more of a statement of fact...and if it is a factual statement of the filmmakers' intent, is there a source quoting them to this effect?)? 107.77.204.138 (talk) 22:53, 1 March 2024 (UTC)