# Talk:Pat Malone

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 07:06, 26 July 2021 (UTC)

Early life

Loathing the name "Perce," Malone insisted on being called "Pat" instead. — Any word on when this started?
I think it was early in his life (hence its inclusion in this section), but the source's didn't specify. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
Lying about his age — To the team, the Army, or both?
Returning to Altoona after his military service — When? Any details of his service?
I said he served a year in the Army. He returned after this year. All details of his service given. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
Did he also attend Juniata College?
The source's wording is "and had a short stint as a football player at Juniata College in Huntingdon, Pennsylvania". I would assume he attended it, but I think phrasing it this way is more consistent with the source. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
Minor League career

The Giants agreed — Why did they relent?
Source doesn't say. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
How many games did he start per season?
Several categories of early minor league stats are unavailable, and this is one of them. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
repeated curfew violations — Any more details on what he was up late doing?
Were the Beaumont Exporters in the same farm system as the Minneapolis Millers?
Back in the 1920s, minor league classifications were not what they are today. Baseball-Reference does not list these teams as being part of any system back then. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
How did he land with the Shreveport Sports? Trade? Expired contract followed by a new contract?
The source does not say. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
Also making four appearances for Minneapolis — And how did he make it back there?
The source does not say. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
In general, I'm confused about how Malone was jumping between teams, be it promotions, demotions, new contracts, or what else.
It may be confusing, but the sources don't give information on all these transactions. The most important things are that he played with the teams, and how he did with them--this is given. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
The deal was for $25,000 total — To Malone, or to Minneapolis?
1929

What was the series score going into game 2? Game 4?
a couple more — How many?
1930

he was arrested for disorderly conduct — Any more details?
No. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
1931

shoulder problems — Any more details?
No. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
calling his performance "distasteful. — Odd word. Any more details?
It was due to the poor performance against Boston, already mentioned. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
suspended Wilson — For how long?
Source doesn't say. Back then, a suspension likely would not have been for a certain amount of games at the outset. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
1932

stop carrying on so much — What does this mean?
1933

Shoulder problems — Any more details?
No. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
1934

contractual bonuses that he would have become eligible for had he won 15 games — Any more details? Was it one bonus (15 wins = x money), or multiple bonuses (for multiple benchmarks)?
He eventually reached an agreement with the Cardinals — Details?
No. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
1935

Malone made only two starts in 1935 — Why?
I would assume it was because he was getting older, but sources don't say. It is not our job to speculate. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
neither of which was a good performance — Details?
1936

This section should have a topic sentence. "Nonetheless" isn't great to lead off a new section; something like "Despite Malone's lackluster performance the previous year, ..." would work.
"got himself knocked out in the second inning" — A bit vague/casual.
"Malone entered and pitched six innings" — Was this his first appearance of the year?
No. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
"it was Malone's best start" — He didn't start.
"In 68 innings pitched out of the bullpen, his ERA was 2.12 in the latter part of the year." — Were all 68 innings referred to here in the latter part of the year?
Not sure where "in the latter part of the year" came from; not mentioned in source; removed. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
"no more than four runs in either of the outings" — How many runs per game?
"Malone recorded a save" — But you just said these weren't yet a thing.
I said it wasn't yet an official statistic; I didn't say it wasn't yet a thing. Under the definition of save, statisticians have credited them retroactively. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)
"came in the 10th inning" — Bottom (walkoff) or top?
"giving Malone his only World Series championship" — Somewhat inconsistent with the lead, which says that "He played for ... two World Series champions". I get the distinction (World Series roster), but the emphasis in the article's lead and body is different.
1937

The Sporting News portrayed Malone as a "stout-hearted has-been of another era" — Why? Didn't he do well the season before? Or (as Wolf is about to say), didn't he display "magic"?
They probably just said it because he was getting old, but it's not our job to speculate. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:17, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
According to Wolf, he was "unable to duplicate the magic from the previous season" — Why? It seems odd here, given that it's right after a line about him pitching out of a jam and then doing well for the rest of the game.
Worded it better. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:17, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
Any information about his starts?
None of them were really that notable, so I don't think they need to be covered in greater depth. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:17, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
Final professional season (1938)

"he quit the team in April" — Any word on why?
No. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:17, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
Career statistics

"In a 10-season career" — "In a 10-season major league career"?
Pitching style

"Standing at 6 ft 0 in (1.83 m) and 200 pounds" — If you're going to convert feet to meters, may as well convert pounds to kilograms.
Practical joker

This is a bit of an odd short section, and is probably best incorporated into "Personal" or "Pitching style".
Personal

Any information about Seeley, e.g., her background?
No. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:17, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
Any information about his legacy, to the extent he has one?
This is found in the last paragraph of the 1934 section; not really long enough for its own section. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 01:19, 4 August 2021 (UTC)
Addressed all comments made thus far! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 12:17, 29 July 2021 (UTC)

Looks good, Sanfranciscogiants17. I've made some additional edits, and am passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 22:38, 11 August 2021 (UTC)