# Talk:Sweetums (Parks and Recreation)

I check pages listed in Category:Pages with incorrect ref formatting to try to fix reference errors. One of the things I do is look for content for orphaned references in wikilinked articles. I have found content for some of Sweetums (Parks and Recreation)'s orphans, the problem is that I found more than one version. I can't determine which (if any) is correct for this article, so I am asking for a sentient editor to look it over and copy the correct ref content into this article.

Reference named "EW":
From Pawnee Zoo: Fog, Henning (2009-09-18). ""Parks and Recreation" recap: Change we can believe in". Entertainment Weekly. Retrieved 2009-09-22.
From Leslie's House: Gonzalez, Sandra (January 22, 2010). ""Parks and Recreation" recap: House party at Leslie's!". Entertainment Weekly. Retrieved January 22, 2010.

I apologize if any of the above are effectively identical; I am just a simple computer program, so I can't determine whether minor differences are significant or not. AnomieBOT⚡ 23:23, 7 February 2010 (UTC)

This is purely an academic point: I'm not sure that the first line of the culture references belongs in this section. I'm talking about the continued conflict between the library and parks staff. It seems self-referential rather than a cultural reference. I didn't delete it, but it probably belongs elsewhere in the article.Obamafan70 (talk) 17:07, 9 February 2010 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Sweetums (Parks and Recreation)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Arctic Night 08:51, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### General comments
First sentence of 'Plot': should 'parks and recreation' be capitalised? Later on in that section it is. Not sure what the actual spelling is.
I capitalized it. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
In the lead, 'sweetums' is not capitalised, whilst in the plot section it is. I think this should be consistent.
I also capitalized this. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
In the first sentence of 'Cultural references' there is a reference to an earlier episode. Is this really 'cultural'? I wouldn't say so, as it's a self-reference!
I think this should be reworded: "Leslie tells Ron she had already written a eulogy for him and it starts".
A similar issue came up at Talk:Galentine's Day. I explained my reasoning there, so please take a look at that discussion and see if you agree. If you don't, let me know and we'll figure out the best way to deal with it... — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
According to Wikipedia:Citing sources#When quoting someone, you should cite the quotation immediately after the quotation itself. I know it's a little pedantic - see User:Ealdgyth/GA review cheatsheet for reasoning. For example, 'Matt Fowler of IGN called it a "fantastic episode"' should be 'Matt Fowler of IGN called it a "fantastic episode".[12]'.
I think I got them all. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
The final paragraph of 'Reception' contains the word 'said' five times by my count. You may like to consider cutting it down, although this won't really affect a pass/fail or anything.
I replaced some, let me know if we need more. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
I think that the word 'propaganda' sounds like it's pushing a bit of a POV. However, according to propaganda, the videos shown in the episode were essentially just that, propaganda, so I can't really think of anything better to say. Never mind.
Ok. lol — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
OK, I know I've already said it, but remember to cite those quotations, especially the one from The Star-Ledger!
Ok. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
The image in the infobox should probably have some alt text. See WP:ALT#Essence for help.
Added. — Hunter Kahn 15:25, 23 February 2010 (UTC)
Fix these issues up and I'll happily pass this article. I can't find anything else wrong here. Arctic Night 09:21, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

OK, passed. Arctic Night 11:37, 24 February 2010 (UTC)