# Talk:SS Ira H. Owen

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:22, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments

"she entered service later in 1887." you already said this, so delete, and then merge what's left of the sentence with the previous one.
"the National Steamship Company of Chicago, on December 30, 1899. While owned by the National Steamship Company, Ira H. Owen frequently " -> "the National Steamship Company of Chicago, on December 30, 1899, for whom she frequently "
"what would be known" become.
"storm had passed, Captain Keller looked" -> "he looked"
"The wreck of Ira H. Owen has not been located." avoid single-sentence paragraphs.
"had a stroke of" link for stroke?
"Steam for which was provided" for which what?  Maybe just delete.
"hull number 14" infobox says "Yard number" 14, potentially confusing mixture in jargon.
"in Chicago, Illinois on " comma after Illinois.
"Ira H. Owen was involved in her first accident" -> "The first accident..." to avoid almost carbon-copy text.
"two-masted schooner Belle Brown" masted is overlinked.
"proceeded to head for" ->" headed for"
"laden with iron ore, Ira" overlinked.
No need to link fog.
"Owen proceeded to head for" see above.
"headed for" -> "proceeded to".
"$10,000 worth" inflate?
"eventually proved that" proved or proven?
"December 5, 1903 with" comma after 1903.
"Ann Arbor No.1 decided to tow" the boat decided?
"and fought the fire while" -> " and the fire was fought"
Could link car ferry.
What's upbound?
""for Buffalo, New York.[16" overlinked.
"Thomas Honner. Honner, previously" quick repeat, merge.
"51-52." en-dash.
Likewise for all other page ranges in the refs.
Three spaced hyphens in the Sources section should be en-dashes.
That's it, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:45, 8 May 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: All done. GreatLakesShips (talk) 22:25, 8 May 2021 (UTC)
Ok, promoting, good work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:03, 9 May 2021 (UTC)

Shouldn't an article on an American-built, American-operated, American-flagged ship that never left North America be written in American English?  Surely that's a "strong national tie" per MOS:TIES? - Dumelow (talk) 06:30, 10 May 2021 (UTC)