# Talk:Philadelphia Flyers–Ottawa Senators brawl

What about the penalties at 18:18 for Neil/Somik and Chara/Timander?  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.201.84.80 (talk) 05:24, 12 December 2013 (UTC) 

Addressed this now. Harrias talk 18:00, 22 January 2015 (UTC)

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 07:32, 1 July 2015 (UTC)

Comments (note, outside my comfort zone, knowing zero about NHL but article looked interesting!)

"in a league-record for" don't think this needs to be hyphenated, if it said "in a league-record number of minutes" it would be...
Changed as suggested.
"The 213 minutes assessed against Philadelphia were also a record" was also a record?
Changed as suggested.
"as were the " was?  the record is singular.
Changed as suggested.
" incidents were precipitated by an incident" repetitive.
Changed to "events were precipitated by an incident".
"of the hockey game" is hockey needed here?
Removed.
"got involved" strong dislike for "got", perhaps "became"?
Changed as suggested.
"The first instance angered..." sorry, which first instance?
Changed to "The first of these angered.." Does that make any more sense? (It might not.)
"late February" now I think that should be hyphenated.
Changed as suggested.
Is there a link for "high-sticking"?
Yup, added.
"leaving their crease as well as fighting majors" bit jargon loaded here, not helpful for non-experts.
I added a link for "leaving their crease" and "fighting". Major penalty was already linked to in the background section.
"face-off" is linked somewhat late in the article...
It is linked in the lead, and then the first usage in the body.
"Within 24 second of" missing s.
Oops. Added.
"a misconduct and double game misconduct" again, jargon heavy, no links, help!!
Added a link for "misconduct". "Game misconduct" is already linked. Should I put a note to explain the "double"?
" that the Senators "knew we had to fight back.... " now, in this quote I would think that you should replace "we" with "[they]" so the sentence (including the part before the quote) makes grammatical sense.
Changed as suggested.
"with lots of" with many, with numerous, just something a little more toned than "lots of".
Changed as suggested.
"head coach, Jacques Martin. However, he was restrained by Flyers Public Relations Director Zack Hill.." merge, to "... Martin, but was restrained..."
Reworked this a bit, how is it now?
"despite some bluster" is this encyclopedic?
Nope, changes to "despite some claims"
Any reason why the score in the Box score table is in bold?
It's the way it's done in all the hockey article with that table. I made it plain text though.
"Number in parenthesis " -> parentheses.
Oops. Fixed.
Be consistent with linking player's names in the penalty table, e.g. you relink Fisher, but not Somik for some reason.
Oops. Fixed.
"John LeClair" not "John Leclair"
Oops. Fixed.
Very interesting read.  A whole different world... I'll put it on hold to look at these quibbles, nothing major though. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:08, 1 July 2015 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review. It's something different to cricket, that's for sure! I've addressed each of your points. Harrias talk 08:50, 3 July 2015 (UTC)
Good stuff, I have no problems with your fixes, so I'm happy to promote to GA.  Nice work.  The Rambling Man (talk) 12:59, 3 July 2015 (UTC)