# Talk:Rob Pelinka

I agree, this article has no place in an encyclopedia  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 67.242.23.104 (talk) 00:41, 14 May 2013 (UTC) 

This article is way way too long. It's a marketing site for his firm. JoshAnish (talk) 05:12, 20 December 2009 (UTC)JoshAnish
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Help me out here.  I don't understand why Rob Pelinka is in Wikipedia.  What direct impact has he had?  How is he influential-- that to me is the chief criterion for getting into Wikipedia. He seems like a super-hard working guy...  but so are a lot of others who are not included in Wikipedia. I'm all for communities on the web and sharing info, but this doesn't seem right.  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.120.71.16 (talk) 02:24, 18 April 2008 (UTC) 

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At this time, I am going to fail this, because I feel that this article needs a lot of work yet to be a GA. 

Citation #5 is blank.
Kobe Bryant section has a fact tag on it.
Education and Honors should be converted into prose.
By that same token, some facts are both pointed out and discussed twice, plus with the way it's written the lead seems like the high school and college paragraph rather then a lead.
Can the Maggette and Gordon sections be expanded? If not try to make it so that there's not a bunch of two sentence paragraphs.
Wizardman 20:06, 28 June 2008 (UTC)

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Lead
"As a basketball player he is former high school All-American who as a junior led Lake Forest High School to its first conference championship and as a senior made all 42 of his free throws in a four game high school basketball tournament." Lots going on in this sentence. It certainly needs some commas but might be best splitting into at least two sentences.
Totally reworked and beefed up.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  07:03, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
High School
Probably should be "High school" not "High School"
Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  16:06, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
"He is a former high school All-American basketball player from Lake Bluff, Illinois (suburban Chicago) and son of a high school basketball coach." I don't like the start. It jumps straight in. Do you have any more info before High School. At the very least it should start "Pelinka is a..."
You are looking at the results of all 261 his name appeared in newspaper articles in the state of Illinois.  There is nothing before his junior year when he became a starter on the basketball team.  All articles that really feature him talk about his senior season for the most part untill they start talking about his professional career.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  16:06, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
Who is Bobby Douglass?
done.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  20:24, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
Should post season be hyphenated? Should preseason?
No.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  20:33, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
"As a senior, he was a preseason selection by the Chicago Sun-Times as one of the top fifty Chicago metropolitan area high school basketball players and top five North Suburban players." Does this refer to Pelinka or Douglass?
Pelinka.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  20:40, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
rebounds links to a disambig page
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  20:58, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
"By the time the February 8, scouting deadline came" I'd reword this to "By the time the scouting deadline on/of February 8 came, ...
done.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  21:18, 21 July 2008 (UTC)
College
Are the first two sentences linked? One states three seasons, the other four.
The link should be clearer now.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:06, 22 July 2008 (UTC)
"This came following the team's first loss of the season, which came against Division II University of Alaska-Anchorage after an 11–0 start," The verb is "came" both times - I'd change one.
Is this cleaner now?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:11, 22 July 2008 (UTC)
"with :05 seconds" I'd just use "with five seconds"
done.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:17, 22 July 2008 (UTC)
Education.
This is a short section, and would probably benefit from being turned into prose. Are there any more details about his education?
I don't have anything else, but I rearranged the text to created a valid section.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:20, 22 July 2008 (UTC)
Is this section too redundant now?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  21:55, 22 July 2008 (UTC)
Professional career
I'd change the name of this section to signify his career as an agent, maybe even just "Agent career". At first thought, I thought it was as a professional basketball player.
The section is properly titled.  You are reading into the proper title incorrectly.  That section describes his professional career starting as a regular lawyer, then sports lawyer, then sports agent, then sport agency owner.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:23, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
"The current players represented by Pelinka are (alphabetically) Carlos Boozer, Kobe Bryant, Keyon Dooling, Derek Fisher, Channing Frye, Eric Gordon, Andre Iguodala, Chris Kaman, Corey Maggette, Morris Peterson, Gerald Wallace, and Julian Wright." This seems to be recentist info to me.
In terms of describing who he is, this is almost the most important set of information.  We say he started his own firm.  We should list his clients.  Basically, he earns 5% or so of whoever his players are.  We should know who he represents and how much they are paid to understand his company.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:20, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
"Gordon was drafted 7th overall" Maybe seventh?
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:21, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
Kobe Bryant
"Pelinka is best known as Los Angeles Lakers All-Star guard Kobe Bryant's agent." Do you have a reference for this? Otherwise it looks WP:POV.
Changed to well-known.  Willing to change to known or remover known as entirely.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:39, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
"137 million for Kobe Bryant in 2004" Is this dollars?
It now has a $ in front of it.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:24, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
{{cn}} tag needs addressing.
I hid the claim for now. I am not sure whether it can be sourced.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:36, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
Carlos Boozer
"resigning" - Is this re-signing or resigning?
resiging is correct and the sentence has been tweaked.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:50, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
"Pelinka is now President and CEO of The Landmark Sports Agency, LLC." I'm unsure how this info is specific to Carlos Boozer.
SFX did not want to retain a client who would reneg on a handshake.  In order to get Boozer back Pelinka had to start his own firm.  Do you want me to go into further detail in the article?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  03:53, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
Corey Magette
"Recently" I'd change this word, otherwise it can become dated too soon.
The section was not encyclopedic and was removed.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  04:37, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
General
Scores and seasons should use endashes not hyphens per WP:DASH, e.g. 1991–92 not 1991-92.
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  04:52, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
The seasons also switch between full years and decades, e.g. should all be 1988-89 or 1988-1989 - I prefer the former.
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  04:52, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
Dates - all or no dates should be wikilinked. They should also follow the correct format per WP:DATE.
I am leaning toward all dates because that is the preponderant style although I am a proponent of no dates.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  04:52, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
Do you have some images? Even if you can use one of some of his clients, just to break up the text.
No pics of him.  I will add pics of his all-stars.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  04:57, 23 July 2008 (UTC)
There's a lot to do, but nothing major in itself, so I'll put it on hold. Peanut4 (talk) 15:59, 20 July 2008 (UTC)
Second review

High school
"In the four-game December 1987 Elgin tournament, where he was named tournament MVP," tournament twice, change the second clause to "in which he was named MVP", "during which ..." something like that.
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  17:58, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
"After his tournament". Is his correct? Shouldn't it just be "the tournament"
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  17:58, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
College
"The team finished with at 14–15 (7–11) record and did not compete in postseason play." I don't understand the difference between the two records.
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:02, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
"During his redshirt junior year, he was joined at Michigan by five freshmen (Webber, Howard, Rose, King and Jackson) who became known as the Fab Five." This is mentioned above.
Is this O.K.?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:02, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
"Early in the season, he started in place of Jackson during an injury," Who was injured?
How is that?--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:02, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
Professional career
"Rob Pelinka was involved in a complex negotiation which led to both SFX resigning as the agency for Carlos Boozer and to Pelinka briefly resigning as his agent." I still don't like this sentence particularly the use of re-signing or resigning. Is this "signing again" or "handing in notice?"
It is giving notice (without the hyphen as written).
"2008 restricted free agent Vujačić switched agents to Pelinka in July 2008." I don't understand what this means, and secondly don't like a sentence starting with 2008.
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:13, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
College statistics
I think this would look better with lines between the rows/columns. At the moment some of the numbers merge into each other.
done.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:19, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
General
The style of numbers flits between text and numerals. I prefer text for numbers above ten, and numerals otherwise. See WP:MOSNUM.
I think I got them all.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  18:47, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
Not much to do this time. Peanut4 (talk) 23:44, 23 July 2008 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 
It needs at least one image of Pelinka himself but a couple more would be better, especially to break up the text
Overall:
Pass/Fail: 

Great work, and hopefully some decent improvement since the start of the GA process. The text is now probably fairly close to FA standard. Obviously the article needs a few images, but I would suggest a peer review, if you were thinking of push it towards FAC. All the best with future improvements. Peanut4 (talk) 23:09, 24 July 2008 (UTC)
At this point, he is notable as the Lakers' GM and perhaps his work as an agent. The odd thing about this article is it focuses on the less notable things. It makes sense to talk about his playing career, but briefly. He was a solid, but unspectacular college player. And of course, now with the Magic Johnson feud, this page may get ugly for awhile (5-20-19).

I have not been able to find out what type of High School All-American Pelinka was, but my best guess is that he was an Academic All-American.  Any help would be nice.--TonyTheTiger (t/c/bio/WP:CHICAGO/WP:LOTM)  06:38, 29 March 2009 (UTC)

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