# Talk:People Move On

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This review is transcluded from Talk:People Move On/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Ippantekina (talk · contribs) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)

Will review this within a week-- Ippantekina (talk) 01:39, 20 August 2022 (UTC)


### Lead
"before starting his solo career" was he part of a band/project before?
McAlmont & Butler – mentioned earlier in the sentence. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)


### Background
"produced Hopper's sole album" do you mean solo?
Sole – their only album. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
", and contemplated what to do with his life, and decided to start a solo career" the first "and" is redundant
Link demo


### Writing and production
"would like to collaborate Ashcroft" collaborate with
The wikilink to Makoto Sakamoto is an article about a Japanese athlete. Do you think the wikilink is correct?
Link mixing
Link mastering


### Composition and lyrics
"compared to the work of Jeff Buckley, Young, and Wilco" is "Young" here Neil Young?
"Drawing influences from classic rock from the late 1960s and 1970s, Lucy O'Brien of The Independent wrote" grammar
"Though Butler has stressed that it isn't a "retro record".[25]" grammar
Link jargon terms like crescendo and coda


### Critical reception
Link vinyl
I've linked it in the Reissues section instead. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)


### Reception
The Birmingham Post quote is too long; consider trimming it down


### Sources
There are a lot of harv errors in the sources ("Harv warning: There is no link pointing to this citation"). Install this script and fix accordingly.
I haven't used the harv template/parameter so I'm not sure why the warning would be coming up at all? MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
I suggest using {{sfn}}. Very useful in guiding which source the ref points to, too. Ippantekina (talk) 08:42, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
Added. MusicforthePeople (talk) 09:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
Superb. No more harv erros. Ippantekina (talk) 09:01, 22 August 2022 (UTC)


### Overall
Putting this  On hold for seven days. Ippantekina (talk) 01:52, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
@Ippantekina: Made most of the changes, but see above for comments. MusicforthePeople (talk) 08:34, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
@MusicforthePeople: Thank you for addressing the comments. I have one remaining issue with refs/harv. Ippantekina (talk) 08:43, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
@Ippantekina: Done. MusicforthePeople (talk) 09:00, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
Passing-- Ippantekina (talk) 09:02, 22 August 2022 (UTC)