# Talk:USS Thetis Bay

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:55, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

"painted in Measure 33, Design 10A camouflage" isn't mentioned in the article or referenced here.
Changes in camouflage aren't usually recorded, and I think that it provides some useful context when viewing the image.
I just wanted to see it referenced.  The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 07:01, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
"mythology.[3] The" always seems odd to cite just one fact in a lead.  This should be mentioned in the main body so just reference it there.
"the Nereid Thetis" mildly troubling sea of blue issue here, especially if you don't (and many won't) know what Nereid means.
"The bay is .." we've somewhat lost this in the previous lengthy sentence.
"The ship was launched in March..." similar, perhaps we can say "Thetis Bay was launched..."
Both addressed by moving the naming part down.
"in Operation Magic Carpet" no need for a pipelink.
"early war losses" would that be "early-war losses"?
"1 Battle star" -> "1 battle star".
"Washington under" comma after Washington.
Yeah, the naming details belong here, not in the lead.  Or at least in both place, not exclusively the lead.
Year ranges in service record in infobox should use en-dash not hyphen to separate.
Some text sandwiching going on where you have images both left and right of text.
"Luzon, the Philippines throughout" comma after Philippines.
" a Landing Platform Helicopter" why is that capitalised?
"In August 1959, Thetis Bay" too many run-ons and I'm not sure the grammar works at the end...
"anchored off of" no need for of.
"from the Navy list on" any reason we can't give it the full official name?
Ref 10, I have to subscribe to see this.
Fix text size of External links et seq.
That's all I have for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:41, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: I've addressed your points. Stikkyy  t/c 20:55, 5 September 2021 (UTC)