# Talk:Typhoon Nelson (1982)

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:06, 25 June 2014 (UTC)

"Nelson originated from a tropical disturbance southeast of Guam towards the end of March. " - March 19 isn't toward the end of March
Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"Although the system was initially poorly organized, the system "
Made the second one "it". YE Pacific Hurricane
Why not mention peak winds in lede?
I hate doing this, but added, because it should be there. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"eight of which" - use "whom" when it's about people
Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"Ten hours after the TCFA" - which you never mention
Noted. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"Early on March 19, the JMA classified the system as Tropical Storm Nelson." - at that time, the JTWC was responsible for naming. Maybe just say "classified the system as a tropical storm."?
Good call. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"more conductive conditions" - did you mean "conducive"?
That works. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
" and by that afternoon" - you never mention a date in that paragraph
Noted. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"both the JTWC and JMA increased the intensity to 195 km/h (120 mph)" - not according to the infobox
See below. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"the JTWC indicated that Nelson strengthen slightly on March 25, and attained winds of 185 km/h (115 mph)" - I think you have these wind speeds messed up, as 195 is obviously bigger than 185 :P
Reversed. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"Thereafter" - is the second sentence in a row having that word (The other being "Shortly thereafter"). Try changing it up
Better? YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"the JMA had lowered the winds of 100 mph (160 km/h)." - I think you mean "to", not "of". And why mph first?
I fixed both. Regarding the second, I always write everything in mph or knots first, then change it when I GAN it. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"Considered a "pre-season" storm by newspapers, Mamie required storm warnings for parts of the nation, which were broadcast via radio." - this article is about Nelson
I put the wrong tropical cyclone down :P It is Nelson. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"A total of 1,261 dwellings were leveled,[12] including 703 houses were destroyed" - you don't need the 2nd "were" if you have "including"
Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"all but 45 of the town's 600 houses were demolished" - you need "and" here
Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"A total of 165,462 persons evacuated to shelters;[13] approximately 83,000 of which were homeless." - change semicolon to comma, and, once again, use "whom" for people. Does this mean they were homeless when they evacuated, or they became homeless due to the storm?
Did both, and in answer to the third, it's probs the latter. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"Widespread power outages occurred." - pretty short sentence
I merged this and the one below it. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
"Bridges were washed away." - so is this
"Eight of the casualties were due to drownings" - I'm sure more were from drowning, if there were over 50 deaths
Put "at least". YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
I think there might be an issue with the damage total. Ref 6 suggests 147 million in pesos, right? Well, you should fix the link to Philippines Measuring Worth to 1982, as it says 8.54 pesos per US dollar, which would be $17.2 million. That's far less than what you said.
I can't do math here I guess :P I trust you and changed it. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)
All in all, the article is decent, just a little rough around the edges. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:06, 25 June 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. YE Pacific Hurricane 15:58, 25 June 2014 (UTC)