# Talk:USS Pima County

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Nominator: Dumelow (talk · contribs) 09:58, 26 September 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Parsecboy (talk · contribs) 12:16, 20 October 2025 (UTC)
I'll review this one. Parsecboy (talk) 12:16, 20 October 2025 (UTC)

Lead/box

It could be clearer that the ship was originally named LST-1081
Added - Dumelow (talk) 06:49, 22 October 2025 (UTC)
"She caught fire off La Unión, El Salvador on 1 December 1979 and was rendered a total wreck." - this could be more simply said "She was destroyed by fire off La Unión, El Salvador on 1 December 1979."
Yes, excellent suggestion.  Done - Dumelow (talk) 06:49, 22 October 2025 (UTC)
I'd suggest splitting the characteristics into two separate boxes to avoid confusion (we typically do this for ships that had significant refits or alterations, for example, as at Japanese battleship Fusō)
Good idea, I've not done it before but had a go - Dumelow (talk) 11:20, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Construction
Not a requirement, but one piece of feedback I've received (at least a couple of times) is to include a bit of context on the class - you and I know what was going on when the LST-542s were being built, what they were intended for, etc., but the average reader may not.
Good idea, have added some general background to the class - Dumelow (talk) 06:49, 22 October 2025 (UTC)
Do you know the specific length measured (i.e., between perpendiculars, at the waterline, etc.)? If so, can you link it?
Not sure, it's from the DANFS "(LST-1081: dp. 4,080 (f.); l. 328-; b. 50-; dr. 14-1-; s. 11 1 6 k.; cpl. 119; trp. 147; a. 8 40mm., 12 20mm.; cl. LST-511)", do they perhaps use a standard measure? - Dumelow (talk) 11:20, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Also link beam (nautical)
Done - Dumelow (talk) 11:20, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Do you know if Davidson or Dicherry were notable? Generally we don't mention non-notable individuals per WP:SHIPSNOTCREWS
No, I don't think so.  Trimmed the names out - Dumelow (talk) 11:20, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Do you know if the Bofors and Oerlikons were in single, twin, or quad mounts?
Not sure, it comes from the DANFS, which I've quoted above - Dumelow (talk) 11:20, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Naval service
Need closing commas after "Pearl Harbor, Hawaii", "Morehead City, North Carolina reached her new base at Norfolk, Virginia"
Done - Dumelow (talk) 11:25, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
May be useful to note that the fighting on Okinawa had ended by the time LST-1081 arrived there
Added "shortly after the end of the Battle of Okinawa" - Dumelow (talk) 11:25, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Probably also want to be specific about the war ending - right now, there's just an "After the war", which sounds like an afterthought
Prefaced this section with "The Pacific War ended on 2 September 1945"
"On 1 February she was allocated to the 19th Fleet, when that fleet became the Pacific Reserve Fleet she was assigned to its Columbia River group." - this doesn't read quite right to me. You could say:
"On 1 February she was allocated to the 19th Fleet, and when that fleet became the Pacific Reserve Fleet, she was assigned to its Columbia River group."
"On 1 February she was allocated to the 19th Fleet. When that fleet became the Pacific Reserve Fleet, she was assigned to its Columbia River group."
Yes, I agreed.  Went with the first one - Dumelow (talk) 11:25, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
"After the North Korean invasion started the Korean War on 25 June 1950" - need a comma here
Added - Dumelow (talk) 11:25, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
"She was ordered to reactivate on 7 August 1950 and was recommissioned on 2 February 1951 and assigned to a home yard in Puget Sound." - can't have
Not sure what this comment means?  I've replaced the first "and" with a comma - Dumelow (talk) 11:25, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Merchant service
"draught" - the article should use a consistent spelling, even though the nationality changed
Well spotted, switched to "draft" - Dumelow (talk) 11:27, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
"circa" - I've always understood "circa" to be specifically related to time, not any quantity
switched to "around" - Dumelow (talk) 11:27, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
More closing commas for " Tilbury, Essex and Felixstowe, Suffolk" and then "Preston, Lancashire to Larne, County Antrim"
Added - Dumelow (talk) 11:27, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
References
The DANFS entry for Pima County has a publication date that should be added to the citation
Added - Dumelow (talk) 11:43, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
The two citations to Warship International should be using the {{cite journal}} template. I believe those should both have the title "Naval Intelligence" (or at least that's what's off the top of my head). I may have those volumes at home to confirm. Parsecboy (talk) 13:13, 20 October 2025 (UTC)
I didn't realise but the back copies are on JSTOR so accessible through WP:TWL; added.
Thanks for your review Parsecboy and your suggestions (I am not an expert on ship articles so they have been very helpful); I think I have actioned everything above- Dumelow (talk) 11:43, 23 October 2025 (UTC)
Great work, everything looks to be in good order now. Happy to promote! Parsecboy (talk) 13:21, 23 October 2025 (UTC)