# Talk:Roy Lester

This review is transcluded from Talk:Roy Lester/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Brad78 (talk) 22:05, 6 September 2010 (UTC)

Lead
Seems a bit light. On reading through the article, I'd mention something more about his time at Maryland; perhaps the turnover of coaches before he took over, his previous applications or the reasons for his sacking. Or perhaps all three.
Y Expanded. Let me know if that is satisfactory.
Early life
"Lester was named to the West Virginia 1940–1949 All-Time Team." Is this right? 1940–1949 and All-Time Team seemed to be a bit contradictory.
Y Fixed.
High school coach
"He then moved on to Allegany High School in Cumberland, Maryland." Rather than use "then" it would be better to say which year.
Y I used "following year" to make it less redundant with repeated numerical years.
I agree about the overuse of years and dates. Nice change. Brad78 (talk) 18:32, 10 September 2010 (UTC)
Maryland
"In the season's second-to-last game," Would penultimate game not be better?
Y Changed.
"Lester attributed Maryland's football woes to the turnover at head coach and lack of depth due to recruiting shortcomings." recruiting shortcomings doesn't quite sound right. How about recruitment shortcomings?
Y Changed.
Return to high school coaching
"His combined high school coaching record was 260–72–3." Do you have a source for this?
Y Removed it, because I can't find a source. It looks like he won 260 games at Montgomery County schools alone though, which wouldn't include Walton or Allegany.
GA review (see here for criteria)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
On the whole, a good read and well written. Just those points above need addressing.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 
Just needs a reference for the record, as above
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 
Brad78 (talk) 22:19, 6 September 2010 (UTC)
Thanks for the review. I made some changes to address your comments. Please let me know how that looks, and if you have any other concerns. Strikehold (talk) 23:41, 9 September 2010 (UTC)
Everything's great now. Nice expansion on the lead. Now passes the GA criteria. Brad78 (talk) 18:34, 10 September 2010 (UTC)

This article recently failed an ITN nomination and was noted as not being a GA, so requesting reassessment. - Indefensible (talk) 02:25, 9 May 2020 (UTC)