# Talk:Silly Boy Blue

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:50, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Here is another review for you! --K. Peake 09:50, 6 April 2022 (UTC)

Kyle Peake Thanks for reviewing Kyle. I'll be able to get to this on Sunday probably. I have a busy next few days. Cheers friend :-) – zmbro (talk) (cont) 02:30, 8 April 2022 (UTC)
Good news there, especially with Sunday being my only remaining day off work! --K. Peake 06:14, 8 April 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
Pipe demoed to Demo (music)
"with a new lyric and arrangement" → "with new lyrics"
Both done
"has appeared on compilations." → "has appeared on releases."
Feel like compilations is more specific and 'releases' is too generic. Added link here. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
"and during two of his" → "and during his respective"
Pipe acoustically to Acoustic music
Both done
"and was included on" → "and was included on the compilation album" with the wikilink
See above
"while Bowie revisited Tibetan themes" → "whereas Bowie revisited the Tibetan themes"
"performed this arrangement in New York in" → "performed this version at New York's Carnegie Hall in" with the wikilink
"saw official release" → "saw an official release"
Above three done


### Recording and composition
Retitle to Background and composition
First para looks good!
Wikilink Tibet on the quote box
"A year later, he" → "In 1966, Bowie" per this being a new para
Wikilink Decca Studios
Pipe key to Key (music)
"Bowie rewrote its lyrics" → "Bowie rewrote the lyrics"
Wikilink cello
"on backing vocals." → "on her vocals."
Pipe baseline to Bassline
Mention the release year of the version of Bob Dylan's recording
All done
Are you sure that "resolving" is the appropriate term here?
How about 'ending'? – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)


### Release and aftermath
"Silly Boy Blue" is sequenced as the second track, so alter this error appropriately
Well that's extra embarrassing, fixed – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
"considered it one of" → "considered the track one of"
"He ultimately felt" → "Unterberger ultimately felt"
"again at London's Decca Studios," → "again at Decca Studios," per the studio's location already having been mentioned
Add the release year of "Waiting for the Man"
Pipe acoustic to Acoustic music
Pipe mime to Mime artist
"and 13 May 1968." → "and 13 May 1968, respectively."
All done


### Toy version
"other tracks Bowie wrote" → "other tracks he wrote" to avoid overusage of Bowie
"so to prevent" → "as so to prevent"
"this new version is" → "the new version is"
"of "Silly Boy Blue" at the" → "of "Silly Boy Blue" for the" to avoid overusage of at
"arguing that its" → "arguing that a"
All done


### Personnel
Any note(s) that could be added from the unknown musicians?
Unfortunately nope. Many of the session musicians from this period were undocumented. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)


### References
Copyvio score looks phenomenal at 8.3%!!!!
Ayyyyyyy
WP:OVERLINK of Rolling Stone on ref 22
WP:OVERLINK of The Guardian on ref 33
Both done


#### Sources
Good


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 11:05, 6 April 2022 (UTC)
Kyle Peake All set. Sorry almost completely forgot about this. Thanks again Kyle. – zmbro (talk) (cont) 03:08, 11 April 2022 (UTC)
 Pass now, I was thinking yesterday where was your response but I am very glad to see it by now! --K. Peake 06:31, 11 April 2022 (UTC)