# Talk:Pilar Shimizu

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
Reviewing this as part of a GA sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### General
All mentions of 50 m, 100 m and 200 m would be better off being spelt out
Done Kees08 (Talk)


### Early life and education
"Pilar Shimizu was born May 27, 1996, in Tamuning, Guam." - Pilar Shimizu was born in the Guam city of Tamuning on May 27, 1996.
"Shimizu learned to swim at age four and started training at age seven." - This sentence needs to be cited to a reliable source.
"Shimizu is studying public health at Johns Hopkins University, " - link Johns Hopkins University
Done Kees08 (Talk)


### Collegiate career
"she was part of the 200 yard medley relay" - link 200 yard medley relay to 200 metres individual medley
Well, the 200 yard is technically different from the 200 meter isn't it? Kees08 (Talk)
D'oh so it is. My mistake.. MWright96 (talk) 11:55, 19 April 2018 (UTC)
"The team received First Team All-America" - Wikilink All-America
Done Kees08 (Talk)
"and competed for the NCAA Championship." - try and find the apporiate wikilink for the NCAA championship that Shimizu competed in
So...apparently Johns Hopkins is DIII so there will not be an article for it. I can make a redlinked version? Kees08 (Talk)
Only if there is a great deal of independent reliable coverage. MWright96 (talk) 11:55, 19 April 2018 (UTC)


### Olympic career
"She was the youngest Guamanian Olympian ever" - in history
Done Kees08 (Talk)
"Shimizu set the national record for the 100 m breaststroke (set by Tammie Kaee) during the 2012 London Olympics" - established and during the Games
Done Kees08 (Talk)
Also, you should add mention of the 20-year old part to the record that Shimizu broke as you have done in the lead
Done Kees08 (Talk)
"She decided to put her swimming career on hiatus" - start this sentence with Shimizu
Done Kees08 (Talk)


### International career
Wikilink 2009 East Asian Games
Done Kees08 (Talk)
The link to Oceania Swimming Championships should be directed to 2010 Oceania Swimming Championships
Done Kees08 (Talk)
"In the 2015 Pacific Games, Shimizu earned a silver medal in the 50 m with a time of 33.35." - try: In the 2015 Pacific Games, Shimizu earned the 50 meters silver medal with a time of 33.35 seconds.
Done Kees08 (Talk)


### References
Reference seven is lacking the author of the article
Done Kees08 (Talk)
The access date for Reference fifteen is missing
Done Kees08 (Talk)
On hold until all of my concerns have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 10:01, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
@MWright96: Ready for you to take a look (I had a couple questions above). Kees08 (Talk) 06:22, 19 April 2018 (UTC)

@Kees08: Alright I have answered your questions and can now promote this article to GA status. MWright96 (talk) 11:55, 19 April 2018 (UTC)