# Talk:Typhoon Thad

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 20:18, 2 April 2014 (UTC)
Hello Yellow Evan, I will be reviewing this article for GA. Hopefully I should finish sometime today.--12george1 (talk) 20:18, 2 April 2014 (UTC)

"August 15 and was upgrade4d into a tropical storm the next day." - Um, typo? :P
Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 20:58, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
"On August 22, Thad accelerated northward, striking eastern Japan the next day just before weakening to its typhoon" - This doesn't make sense. How can could Thad have weakened to a typhoon (grammar error too, btw).
Fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 20:58, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
"the cyclone transitioned into an extratropical cyclone on August 23." - Then why does the infobox say August 25?
ET does not mean dissipated :P YE Pacific Hurricane 20:58, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
Ok, scratch that--12george1 (talk) 21:13, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
"As such, 1115,00 homeowners were without power during the height of the storm." - You should replace "As such" with something like "Additionally", because a house doesn't need to be demolished or flooded in order to lose electricity. Btw, the comma in the number is in the wrong place (should be 111,500).
Fixed both. YE Pacific Hurricane 20:58, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
"As Moreover, 111,500 homeowners" - This doesn't work either. Just remove "As".--12george1 (talk) 21:13, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
Whoops, fixed. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:21, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
"Roughly 27,000 people were left homeless because of Thad." - Move this to after the second sentence of this paragraph
Moved it to third, actually. YE Pacific Hurricane 20:58, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
Alright, that works too--12george1 (talk) 21:13, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
More stuff later--12george1 (talk) 20:18, 2 April 2014 (UTC)
"northward, striking eastern Japan the next day just" - Back up a little bit. Wikilink "striking" to Landfall (meteorology)
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane
"several hundred miles west of the Philippines in mid-August 1981" - Did it form over Vietnam? :P I think you meant east of the Philippines.
So use to the EPAC. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:21, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
"the cyclone was local within a" - It was local? :P
It was local to WPTC :P Okay, srsly, it is "located" now. YE Pacific Hurricane
"and a minimum pressure of 955 mbar" - Wikilink barometric pressure
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:21, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
"According to the JMA, Thad would maintain its peak wind speed until August 21, when Thad weakened slightly." - Don't use Thad twice in the same sentence. Maybe you should replace the first "Thad" with "the system"/"the cyclone"/"the storm".
 Done. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:21, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
Do you know the publication date of reference #12? If not, simply add |date=1981.
I do, just forgot to include it. YE Pacific Hurricane 21:21, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
Ok, now I am done.--12george1 (talk) 21:13, 4 April 2014 (UTC)
Good job, Yellow Evan. I am now going to pass this article and list it as a Good Article. Congratulations, --12george1 (talk) 03:11, 5 April 2014 (UTC)