# Talk:Tropical Storm Hermine (1980)

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 15:02, 17 April 2012 (UTC)

The first paragraph of the MH is a bit length, unnecessarily so.
"After uneventfully crossing the Atlantic Ocean, the system developed a well-defined circulation while in the Caribbean Sea on September 20. As a result, the system was reclassified as a tropical depression" - try combining these
"After weakening slightly over the Yucatan Peninsula, Hermine quickly began re-strengthening after it emerged into the Gulf of Mexico. Once again, the storm approached hurricane status, though intensification halted when Hermine made landfall in the Mexican state of Veracruz" - try combining these too to something like:
"After weakening over the Yucatan Peninsula, Hermine restrengthened to near-hurricane status again over the Gulf of Mexico before making landfall in the Mexican state of Veracruz."
"However, no estimates of damage associated with the storm were produced." - original research?
"This suggested a possible low-level circulation. However, an Air Force Reserve Flight on September 17 indicated little evidence of a circulation." - merge these sentences.
"west-by-northward" - huh? Why not something simpler like "just north of due west"?
"Hermine passed only 5 miles (8.0 km)" - find a way to get rid of the .0
Did Hermine develop an eye, or anything else? On what basis was the first 70 mph peak intensity estimate? Recon? Buoy?
Did the structure change at all over the Yucatan?
What caused Hermine to turn southward in the GoM?
"Later that day, the National Hurricane Center noted that a low-level circulation could no longer be located.[6] Therefore, Hermine had dissipated early on September 26 over the Mexican state of Oaxaca" - merge these
Were there any gale or hurricane warnings for Yucatan? You mention "Timely warnings were later credited for reducing the loss of life" without mentioning any warnings (unless the warnings are what the officials said, instead of the government storm warnings mentioned earlier).
Have you tried any Spanish sources?
That's all for now. Let me know when you address these. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:02, 17 April 2012 (UTC)

I don't want to fail the article, but these comments still apply. If there is no action taken in the next two days I'll fail it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:06, 27 April 2012 (UTC)
Oh, sorry, I was a little busy with Hurricane Marco. I got the thing about the peak intensity and I will try to work on the other stuff soon.--12george1 (talk) 16:16, 28 April 2012 (UTC)
I check the advisories, discussions, the preliminary report, and MWR, but found nothing about an eye, structure change over the Yucatan, or the reason Hermine turned southward. Remember, this is 1980 we're talking about; there may not be details about all that stuff.--12george1 (talk) 17:13, 28 April 2012 (UTC)
IDK, this suggests that the high terrain influenced the motion. Also, I read a discussion that said Helene had the chance to become a hurricane, which seems worthy of adding to the article. Also, I think you should mention that the storm was predicted to continue to the northwest. I think you should try and add more from the discussions. Also, what about Spanish sources? And watches or warnings? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  19:19, 28 April 2012 (UTC)