# Talk:W. Webber Kelly

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Reviewer: Sportsfan77777 (talk · contribs) 05:12, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

And this one. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:12, 8 April 2019 (UTC)


### Lead
Same comment: I would just link "Green Bay Football Corporation" to "Green Bay Packers, Inc." and get rid of what is in the parentheses.
Also same comment: I don't think Board of Directors should be capitalized, and it should be "Packers' board of directors".


### Early life
Patrick Kelly was a member of the British Army ===>>> His father was a member of the British Army.
He completed some post-graduate work in Vienna, Austria before moving to America in 1903. ===>>> He completed some post-graduate work in Vienna, Austria before moving to America in 1903. He took a post-graduate job in Vienna, Austria in surgery and medicine before moving to America later that year.
Can you clarify this one? Did you accidentally repeat the original sentence? I also don't like the second sentence as the source uses "work", not "job". Job implies actual pay, whereas post-grad work usually entails some blurring of lines of a job versus an internship. Since the source isn't clear, I prefer to stick with "work". « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  19:49, 8 April 2019 (UTC)
Okay, that's fair. I don't think the source is using the right terminology, but that's on them. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:31, 9 April 2019 (UTC)


### Medical career
In 1914 he was admitted to the American College of Surgeons and completed more post-graduate work in surgery and medicine in London, England. ===>>> In 1914, he was admitted to the American College of Surgeons following more post-graduate work in London, England.


### Green Bay Packers
the Packers would have still had to pay the Duluth team ===>>> the Packers would have still needed to pay the Duluth team
Board of Directors capitalized
In 1929, he was elected (add comma)
Kelly resigned as president ===>>> After the season ended, Kelly resigned as president
then replacing Kelly as team physician ===>>> then removing Kelly as team physician (OR add who he replaced him with)


### Personal life
Good.


### Overall
No dab links.
All of the links work.
No bare refs.
Image seems fine.
Solid overall. Placing on hold. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 05:53, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for another review Sportsfan77777! Everything done except the one noted above. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  19:49, 8 April 2019 (UTC)
Passed! Sportsfan77777 (talk) 04:32, 9 April 2019 (UTC)