# Talk:Rain in England

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 02:09, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
Assuming you don't mind another review from me so soon, I'll be glad to take this one; I'm trying to clean out some of the older articles from the backlog. Again, sorry you had to wait so long for a reviewer; it seems there's many more people who want to nominate music articles this year than who want to review them, unfortunately. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 02:09, 27 June 2013 (UTC)


### Initial comments
This looks like more extremely solid work from you. Again, it seems well written and well sourced, and I've made only a few tweaks as I read along. A few quibbles I didn't want to change without discussing are below:

"Rain in England is, most likely, the first ambient hip hop album" -- "most likely" seems like a mild overstatement of the sources--one says "perhaps", the second says "I'm just going to take his word". I'd suggest going with "is perhaps the first ambient hip hop album" or "which Lil B describes as the first ..." -- would either of these be acceptable to you?
" of influential hip hop blog " -- the "influential" here seems like minor peacocking/OR, since none of the other sources are evaluated in-text. Could this word simply be removed?
"The transcript of the lecture was itself adapted into an ambient music piece with a synthesized voice, and the result was compared to Rain in England" -- the passive voice of this sentence could be clarified to make it clear that E Rock adapted this rather than Lil B, and also who made the comparison; I had trouble understanding it without clicking through to the source. -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:21, 27 June 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for your edits to address the above. I still think it's worth noting who made this comparison in-text, but this is a small enough point that I won't hold up the review for it. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:45, 28 June 2013 (UTC)


### Checklist
To summarize, this article is clearly ripe for promotion; I'd just like to get your thoughts on these minor points first. -- Khazar2 (talk) 17:26, 27 June 2013 (UTC)