# Talk:Return of the Obra Dinn

Hi! Would anyone have issues if I were to expand the article with a view to take it to GAN? As far as I can see, it needs some general cleanup, some more citations for gameplay, and a full expansion of the reception. Would there be any issues with me taking this project on? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 21:44, 28 July 2021 (UTC)

As one of the original major contributors to this article I'd see no problem with you taking the reins on polishing and working through GAN; I can help out when it gets there. --Masem (t) 01:30, 29 July 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Return of the Obra Dinn/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 06:27, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

Taking a look now....you know the drill...Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:27, 26 August 2021 (UTC)

If "Memento Mortem" is a foreign phrase...should it not be in italics?
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
As they rowed away, three mermaids attacked the boats and killed several of the group. - the subject changes oddly here - it'd be good to align the subjects between the clauses ahd a go at this myself
The game also has quite the tonal shift at this time. I'm not sure how we would reword this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
to move in a 3D space rewrite as "to move in a three dimensional space" (and link I think?)
Added Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
Pope faced preliminary issues at this stage.  - this sentence is just sorta plonked there - is a bit vague, can it be removed?
Sure, done. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
Any subsequent games cite this as an influence?
I haven't come across such a thing, but wouldn't be adverse to adding this if there were games that did.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
A nice read overall. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:40, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
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Pass or Fail:  - just minor quibbles really. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 06:42, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
Hi Cas, thanks for the review. Do you mind giving me a couple days to have a chance to look at these points/changes? Should be less than a week. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 06:46, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
no problemo Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 11:39, 26 August 2021 (UTC)
Hi Cas, I've answered all of the above, although some of the points I haven't actioned.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 19:11, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
Forgot the ping. Casliber, I've addressed the above. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:43, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
all Good....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:33, 3 September 2021 (UTC)