# Talk:Ypsilanti Heritage Festival

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Reviewer: LauraHale (talk · contribs) 21:25, 18 April 2012 (UTC)


### 1. Well-written:
Assessed against:

(a) the prose is clear and concise, respects copyright laws, and the spelling and grammar are correct; and
(b) it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.[2]
 Information in the lead needs to be better summarise article.  Concerned it does not as it has citations in it.
The sole citation has been removed from the lead. cmadler (talk) 03:36, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
 "The festival was conceived and first held on Saturday, July 15, 1978, "from noon 'til nightfall"." The festival was thought of and first held on the same day?
I'm fairly sure this was an error, and I've removed it. cmadler (talk) 03:25, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
 The poster advertised a noon sidewalk promenade led by the Honorable George Goodman "Hizzoner" the mayor of Ypsilanti and exciting ribbon cutting ceremonies, dedications and plain or fancy walkin'. <-- Why is that in italics?
The italicized portion is a direct quote from the poster. I suppose it could be in single quotes instead; normal double quotes are out because they are used within the quotation and it's too short for any kind of blockquote. cmadler (talk) 02:51, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
"In 2007, the parade attracted wider attention when"  From whom did it receive wider attention?
There was a flurry of newspaper articles about this (e.g. Detroit News). They are all very similar, and my guess is that they were based closely on some press release by the anti-tax group, which was presumably attempting to turn the exclusion to political advantage, but that's supposition and even if true is OR. cmadler (talk) 04:39, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
 Appears to pass the layout criteria.
 Plagiarism check: here, here, here, here, here, here, here, and here.
 Spelling and grammar outside errors pointed out appear fine. --LauraHale (talk) 21:41, 18 April 2012 (UTC)


### 2. Factually accurate and verifiable:
Assessed against:

(a) it provides references to all sources of information in the section(s) dedicated to the attribution of these sources according to the guide to layout;
(b) it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines;[3] and
(c) it contains no original research.
 Verifiability: This source does not appear to exist. Ditto with this source. Same with this, this and here
Detroit News source updated with archive (Newsbank) url. cmadler (talk) 03:59, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
The heritage.com source (fourth in your list above) does exist at that URL. I'm looking for replacement/archived links for the other four. cmadler (talk) 03:52, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
The three Ann Arbor News sources appear to still be online (see, for example, [1]) but the MLive website is not serving the articles correctly. Ann Arbor News was a print newspaper, so I could eventually convert these to full offline newspaper citations, but it's unlikely that I'll be able to get at the microfilm (to find page numbers) within the next few days. cmadler (talk) 04:16, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
 Verifiability: Article source does not support festival being founded on the same day it was first held.
I'm fairly sure this was an error, and I've removed it. cmadler (talk) 03:25, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
 Verifiability: Outside the lead, there are unsourced statements.
The only remaining unsourced statement is "The Ypsilanti Heritage Festival includes and has included a wide variety of activities and events" -- basically a mini-lead for the "Activities" section. It is followed by mention, with citations, of a historic home tour, a beer garden, gambling, a parade, the Nightmare Cruise, a pole vault competition, a "Beautiful Babies" competition, a rubber duck race, and baseball. Is that not a wide variety of activities and events? cmadler (talk) 04:29, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
While a mini-lead, can you put some citations at the end anyway?  Once this is cleared up, it should be good enough to go. --LauraHale (talk) 06:33, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
Done. cmadler (talk) 10:34, 19 April 2012 (UTC)
 Verifiability: Rest of sources that are not broken appear to support the article text.


### 3. Broad in its coverage:
Assessed against:

(a) it addresses the main aspects of the topic;[4] and
(b) it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
 Article could use more information on festival during the 1980s and 1990s.  If such information exists, it should be included. --LauraHale (talk) 21:45, 18 April 2012 (UTC)
I have not found any online or readily available offline sources for the 80s or 90s beyond the mentions in The Blade and Michigan Living. I am certain that sources are out there, but probably not anything big to add to the article, and in any event will probably have to wait until I can spend a while hunting through microfilm/fiche. cmadler (talk) 03:48, 19 April 2012 (UTC)


### 4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias, giving due weight to each.
 Article reads neutrally to me. --LauraHale (talk) 21:25, 18 April 2012 (UTC)


### 5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
 Article is stable. --LauraHale (talk) 21:25, 18 April 2012 (UTC)


### 6. Illustrated, if possible, by images:
Assessed against:

(a) images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content; and
(b) images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.[7]
 Images have copyrights and acceptable captions. --LauraHale (talk) 21:41, 18 April 2012 (UTC)