# Talk:The Tank (theater)

Hi Onel5969, you added a neutrality disputed tag to this page. Were there any particular points that you felt betrayed a non-neutral POV? I've been especially careful in crafting this page, especially vis-a-vis the sourcing, but please let me know what other work you think the page could use. Thanks, BobAmnertiopsis∴ChatMe! 23:34, 29 July 2017 (UTC)

Hi Bobamnertiopsis - being a former off-Broadway director, I love to see articles about that aspect of NY theater. Here's my view on POV (which also includes articles which have a promotional tone), so any article which begins to sound like a brochure promoting the subject is something which I tag POV. So when I see lines like "The Tank offers free performance space...", or "The company was able to secure an inexpensive month-to-month lease", and "Artists do not pay to use the venue and are paid a portion of the ticket sales, even if their shows are low-selling". On the whole, my "POV radar" was only very minimally set off on this article. I think the main issue is there is no negative balance to the article. Why did it have to move 3 times?  But the POV issue is very minimal, I wouldn't squawk if the tag was removed. Hope this helps. Onel5969 TT me 03:55, 30 July 2017 (UTC)
I concur. This article reads like an advertisement. It needs a heavy rewrite to bring it in line with neutrality guidelines. oknazevad (talk) 23:06, 13 August 2017 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:The Tank (theater)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:39, 19 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Lead feels a little short.  One para is fine but perhaps 50% more?
Done!
"Off-Off-Broadway " our article decapitalises the second off!
Looks like our article decapitalizes both; adopted this here which I like a lot more than Off-Off-Broadway.
Where is the postal address (in the infobox) referenced?
Added!
I think it's permissible to link Manhattan, New York in the lead.
You betcha.
"currently" see WP:CURRENTLY - probably "as of" would be appropriate.
Thanks Epicgenius for doing this.
" is currently suspended" same again.
Ibid.
"they had repaid their startup loans" how had they done that so quickly?  What did they do in those early days?
I was unable to find sources that explained specifically how they were able to pay off the loan but I added info about what they were doing in their early years.
"The Fishtank and later the Fish was " I would put "fish" in quotes rather than italics.
Have placed all three instances during the discussion of the name in quotes.
" the Flea Theater and the Chocolate Factory" two things, is the latter actually notable?  Secondly, you decapitalise The for The Flea Theater and The Chocolate Factory so shouldn't you be doing it for the Tank??
The CF does appear to be notable so added a redlink; made lowercase "the"s consistent throughout.
"several disciplines.[18][19] Each discipline" discipline quick repeated.
Removed!
"discipline–including" and " film–is" I would space these en-dashes.
Fixed by combining sentences.
"curated by one or more curators" seems self-evident....
Removed!
Nothing much more to say, neat article.  On hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 20:04, 19 April 2020 (UTC)

Working on it! Will finish this tomorrow! —Collint c 05:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Thanks The Rambling Man for taking the time to conduct this review! Please let me know if there are any other improvements you feel this article could use. Kindly yours —Collint c 13:49, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
No worries, looks good to me, so I'm promoting.  Cheers.  The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 15:51, 20 April 2020 (UTC)