# Talk:SooperDooperLooper

@Epicgenius:, can you please provide the sources which you know to exist which indicate notability for this topic? Horse Eye's Back (talk) 16:18, 16 August 2022 (UTC)

It was the first looping coaster on the U.S. East Coast and only the second ever in the US. Its construction and its opening were both reported by non-local papers. The Philadelphia Inquirer also reported on the coaster one year after it opened. These were literally just the first few results I found on newspapers.com. The Baltimore Sun later reported on how the coaster was used to teach local students. – Epicgenius (talk) 18:42, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
I think the message was meant to convey that the article itself does not have enough information to make it notable. If you have sources, then they need to be incorporated into the wiki page. Also, despite what the park claimed and sources have subsequently repeated, the whole "first looping coaster on the east coast" claim is highly debatable. Riverside and Kings Dominion both opened looping coasters in 1977, and both are farther east than Hersheypark. Granted, they were shuttle loops, but looping coasters nonetheless. Furthermore, it was not the second looper to open in the U.S., that record goes to Cedar Point's Corkscrew which opened on May 15, 1976, just one week after Magic Mountain's Revolution and a full year before SDL. I also have a hard time thinking of Hersheypark as being associated with the east coast when it is more than 160 miles to the nearest coastline and you have to enter another state. No portion of Pennsylvania touches the Atlantic ocean.—JlACEer (talk) 20:20, 16 August 2022 (UTC)
That is a good point. I was planning to add these sources to the article later, but I was basically responding to Horse Eye's Back's message, which seems to have been prompted by this edit of mine. I see what you mean regarding the looping coaster record - I forgot that Corkscrew also had a loop and, in fact, I actually forgot about all the other looping coasters. If we're really being precise, the first looping coaster on the East Coast is Flip Flap Railway, which opened all the way back in 1895. Even if SDL was on the East Coast, it wasn't anywhere near the first. Honestly, I listed these sources primarily to prove that SDL was, in fact, mentioned in multiple secondary sources. – Epicgenius (talk) 22:12, 16 August 2022 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:SooperDooperLooper/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Newtothisedit (talk · contribs) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
I'll review this --Newtothisedit (talk) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

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### Comments
For the caption of one image it says "SooperDooperLooper's train" and the other it says "SooperDooperLooper's train" I would change this so they have the same wording
Add the year when a date is within a new month Ex: "Work began on the project site on October 29" to "Work began on the project site on October 29 1976"
"The roller coaster's iconic vertical loop was finished" This use of iconic could be seen as peacock language. I would change this sentence to "The roller coaster's vertical loop was finished"
"A 150-foot (46-meter) tunnel was added to part of the roller coaster for the 1979 season which would feature lights and sounds" change to "A 150-foot (46-meter) tunnel featuring lights and sounds was added to the roller coaster for the 1979 season."
"The roller coaster necessitated around 500 tons" to "The roller coaster needed around 500 tons"
That's all I have--Newtothisedit (talk) 02:37, 10 November 2022 (UTC)

@Newtothisedit: Appreciate another review; all suggestions have been fulfilled from above. Let me know if there's anything else you spot! :D Adog (Talk・Cont) 03:45, 10 November 2022 (UTC)
Looks good, passing it. Newtothisedit (talk) 03:49, 10 November 2022 (UTC)