# Talk:St. Joseph's Church, Semarang

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 19:58, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

Will review within the next three days.♦ Dr. Blofeld 19:58, 28 June 2014 (UTC)

Thanks Dr. B. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:52, 28 June 2014 (UTC)
Lede
."As the Catholic population grew, the size of the Gedangan parish diminished as new ones were established." No previous mention of Gedangan. I gather that is the ecclesiastical parish? You might want to mention something about it being within it.
Fixed. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
A new church
"The tower was also given a clock and bells during this period; the clock was removed in 1978 since the machinery was broken. Lijden died in 1882, and the Jesuit Joannes de Vries became the parish priest; all of St. Joseph's head pastors since have been Jesuits.[" The two semi colons repeat a bit on me here, can you find a way to avoid this?
Nixed one. That should be enough. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
"using bricks imported from the Netherlands " -you might link bricks to Dutch brick.♦ Dr. Blofeld 08:33, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Didn't know we had an article . Linked — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
" A multi-story presbytery was begun" -can you reword begun? I never like "was begun".
Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Add a space between 1 and August.
Que? There's a space there. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Must be the font I'm using!♦ Dr. Blofeld 09:39, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
"Also installed that year were carvings depicting the fourteen Stations of the Cross" -do we know the artist?
Will check. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
No, don't see it anywhere. They're not discussed all that much. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:57, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Growth
Three Jesuits were sent, - I think there should probably be a dash here rather than a comma.
Done. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
I'd rather you stated the church rather than "Another church".♦ Dr. Blofeld 08:48, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
"A third church", to be clear that this is yet another. — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Nice article, interesting insight into Catholic history in Indonesia in context too.♦ Dr. Blofeld 08:53, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

Thanks! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 09:03, 29 June 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

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Good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:50, 29 June 2014 (UTC)