# Talk:Pompey stone

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:19, 1 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

"New York circa" comma after NY.
Added
"moved to Albany" link.
added
"William M. Beauchamp did some" who was he?  And can we find a better word than "did"?
"conducted"? descriptor added
"on display as a hoax" as an example of a hoax perhaps?
sure
"1520"[4]" need a full stop.
yup
"the 1911 capitol fire" I know it's a red link but shouldn't that be Capitol?
sure
"Intrigued by the stone, Cleveland brought the stone" brought it.
done
"blacksmith's" why apostrophe?
I can't type all the time, cut
"In 1841 Barber and... " avoid single-sentence paras.
combined with the para below
"In the 1860s...' same.
ditto
" ... of the European in North America." quote needs inline ref immediately.
sure
'in 1894[18] upon' odd place for the ref, end of clause/sentence is fine.
OK
References are normally listed in alphabetical order.
done
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 16:15, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Thanks, The Rambling Man, are my responses satisfactory? Eddie891  Talk Work  13:40, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Citation 8 cites pages 8–10, but the full citation says the article is on pages 12–15.
Can you dig up the original letters in the Syracuse Journal (referred to in Beauchamp 1911)?
I have seen physical copies in the OHA's office, but have not found them digitized. as of yet Eddie891  Talk Work  14:56, 20 January 2022 (UTC)
The article on the Syracuse Journal says it was founded in 1925. Is this the correct paper, or was it something earlier under the same name?
When did Avery and Willard carve and bury it?
Any word on why the scholarly attention kept them from coming forward?
"the most elaborate defense" — According to whom?
The second paragraph in "Analysis" cites to the original sources, which I appreciate. But are there also any newer sources which discuss those analyses?
well authenticated" — The open quotation mark is missing.
"probably made by a companion upon his death in 1520" — Grammatically, this refers to the companion's 1520 death.
The historian Berthold Fernow cited Homes in Justin Winsor's Narrative and Critical History of America (1884). — What did he say about the stone/Homes in the 1884 book?
"shrewdest of all Onondaga antiquarians" — According to whom?
The Spanish Settlements Within the Present Limits of the United States — What year?
Did Parker say anything more about the stone?
"was able to see the original work" — What original work?
"As of 2018" — Is there a current source?
Eddie891, I'm sorry it took so long to get back to this. My further comments are above—they're pretty minor. I like the way it reads, and think the edits you made help the article unfold well. As we discussed, if there are more sources out there from after the hoax was revealed, that would be great. But if not, that shouldn't hold the article back from becoming a featured article. --Usernameunique (talk) 07:14, 18 January 2022 (UTC)