# Talk:William Hoapili Kaʻauwai

The first Hawaiian to circumnavigate the globe was a man named Opie: "Hawaiians traveled on American ships since Captain Robert Gray took Attoo and Opie on board Columbia Rediviva in September 1789 and sailed to Boston arriving 9 August 1790 where Gray walked arm in arm with Attoo dressed in the feathered cloak to meet Governor John Hancock celebrating the first American circumnavigation of the world. Opie was the first Hawaiian to circumnavigate the world returning to Hawaii with Captain Ingraham on Hope sailing from Boston before Gray. Captain Gray sailed a few weeks later for trading in the Pacific Northwest before returning to Hawaii. Gray’s discoveries of Gray’s Harbor and the Columbia River were witnessed by Attoo before the Hawaiian completed his circumnavigation on Columbia Rediviva in 1792."--KAVEBEAR (talk) 06:45, 11 February 2017 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 02:52, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 02:52, 24 August 2018 (UTC)


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He became the only Native Hawaiian to be ordained a priest of the Anglican Church of Hawaii and traveled with its founder Queen Emma to Europe between 1865 and 1866, circumnavigating the globe upon his return eastward via New Zealand. suggest:
He was the only Native Hawaiian to be ordained a priest of the Anglican Church of Hawaii, and traveled with its founder, Queen Emma, to Europe between 1865 and 1866, circumnavigating the globe upon his return eastward via New Zealand.
hrough his mother, he descended from the ancient Hawaiian Mōʻī of Maui, Piʻilani. His mother was also a relative of Governor Hoapili. suggest:
hrough his mother, he descended from the ancient Hawaiian Mōʻī of Maui, Piʻilani, and was also a relative of Governor Hoapili.
Kaʻauwai was elected and served two nonconsecutive terms as a member of the House of Representatives, the lower house of the Hawaiian legislature, for the district of Wailuku on the island of Maui. He was elected in 1862 and re-elected to serve a second term in 1870. suggest:
Kaʻauwai was elected and served two nonconsecutive terms as a member of the House of Representatives, the lower house of the Hawaiian legislature, for the district of Wailuku on the island of Maui, in 1862 and 1870.
he was shunned by King Kamehameha V because of his treatment of Queen Emma and the unauthorized visit to New Zealand. hard to imagine a king "shunning" someone; suggest:
he lost favor with King Kamehameha V because of his treatment of Queen Emma and the unauthorized visit to New Zealand.
@KAVEBEAR: That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:07, 5 September 2018 (UTC)

Atu [Attoo] and Opai [Opie] were the first Hawaiians to circumnavigate the globe [1][2]
KAVEBEAR (talk) 02:10, 11 November 2019 (UTC)