# Talk:Patrick Sandoval

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Reviewer: Newtothisedit (talk · contribs) 01:06, 18 October 2022 (UTC)

I'll pick this up for review. I should begin leaving comments in the next week.--Newtothisedit (talk) 01:06, 18 October 2022 (UTC)

"where he was a standout athlete in football as a punter and baseball as a starting pitcher. He became a notable baseball prospect early in his amateur career, earning selections to multiple all-county and all-league teams" I'd combine these sentances in some way. Right now it is a little clunky and backwards maybe something along the lines of ""where he was a standout athlete in football as a punter and baseball as a starting pitcher, earning selections to multiple all-county and all league baseball teams"
Fixed -- combined the two sentences into one. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
"spent his first two brief seasons between the starting rotation and the bullpen" to "spent his first two brief seasons alternating between the starting rotation and the bullpen"
Fixed. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
wikilink to reliever
Added. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
I'd cut this sentence out of the lead "On July 24, 2021, Sandoval came within two outs of throwing a no-hitter at Target Field before giving up a double." almost getting a no hitter (especially when its not even 1 out away) is to trivial to be in the lead.
Fair point. It's been removed Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)

"Sandoval attended Mission Viejo High School in Mission Viejo, California, where he played baseball and football as a punter." to "Sandoval attended Mission Viejo High School where he played baseball and football as a punter."
Fixed. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)

"striking out 42 in 39+1⁄3 innings" to "striking out 42 batters in 39+1⁄3 innings"
Added. Sewageboy (talk) 07:11, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
"fourth-most on the Angels and second among Angels starters, only behind American League MVP Shohei Ohtani" specify it was the second most among pitchers/starting pitchers right now it's slightly confusing.
I reworded it to "His 2.0 Wins Above Replacement (WAR) was fourth-most among all Angels players and second-most among Angels starting pitchers, only behind American League MVP Shohei Ohtani."

References are formatted well and spot checks are accurate.
Article meets GA criteria

Article meets all good article criteria.
Newtothisedit, I've implemented the changes above. Let me know if there are any other issues to resolve. Sewageboy (talk) 07:28, 21 October 2022 (UTC)
Looks good to me, I'll promote it. Good Job on the article --Newtothisedit (talk) 14:21, 21 October 2022 (UTC)