# Talk:Weaving a Story 2: oral stage

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Nominator: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 19:10, 21 January 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 21:02, 25 March 2025 (UTC)
Will review this article. Sorry for the delay.Tintor2 (talk) 21:02, 25 March 2025 (UTC)
There is not much to say since it's shorter than previous articles I reviewed:

Infobox
The caption's length feels like an overkill. Consider trimming it
Production
Once again you repeat how the series was created. I recommend trimming or start by the episode itself.
Who is Dennis Redmond?
"writer José Andrés Santiago Iglesias" from?
Cultural references
"Evangelion Chronicle" I would specify it's an official guide or magazine. For a second I thought it was a fansite.
Reception
The second paragraph might be included below since the next one is the one starting critical response. Controversy is better kept below (I remember I did something similar with a controversial scene from Gundam SEED that also had a sex scene).
That's all. Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 22:19, 25 March 2025 (UTC)
@Tintor2: OK, I think I fixed everything. Thank you for the review! BTW, be sure to also check out the sources and prove evidence for this, since the new instructions.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 20:19, 29 March 2025 (UTC)

About the sources, it's hard to judge since some don't have archives (Evangelion Chronicle, Neon Genesis Evangelion: Platinum Edition Booklet, Eva Tomo no Kai (in Japanese). Vol. 6. Gainax, etc. but the bibliography addresses some archived works) but I believe it's okay for GA. In contrast FAs seem to be demanding with finding more accessible sources like Chris Redfield so I'll pass it. My only advice with some hard to access source is quoting them in the citaitons.Tintor2 (talk) 21:07, 29 March 2025 (UTC)