# Talk:Rei I

Please do not speedy-delete.  Literally one minute after I started working on it it got slapped with a speedy delete; it's not finished yet, and it will take a little time to fill in more info.  Just because it needs to be expanded doesn't mean it should be removed just yet.  --Vi Veri Veniversum Vivus Vici 11:10, 9 February 2007 (UTC)

It says we don’t see Rei before this point but we DO, abet far earlier, however her actions at the time seem to indicate that she saw Gendo’s word as law (She calls Naoko Akagi a hag simply because Gendo did) so I think I was wrong to add that in the first place. —The preceding unsigned comment was added by The Twilight Goddess (talk • contribs) 22:41, 12 May 2007 (UTC).

Hi, I have just started a copy edit of this article, per the submission made on the GOCE Request page. — BroVic (talk) 13:27, 28 June 2021 (UTC)

 Done — BroVic (talk) 06:50, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Rei I/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 14:13, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Hi there. I'll be reviewing this article. Considering its length I'm pretty sure it will be fast.Tintor2 (talk) 14:13, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

Lead
Everything seems well written. However, the second paragraph seems small in comparison to how big is production and cultural themes. It might be good to expand such paragraph with a brief intro.
Plot
Shinji Ikari is not introduced or wikilinked.
"Rei doesn't flinch and ignores her colleague when he tries to strike up a conversation with her." It seems the more appropiate form for the encyclopedia is using "does not" instead of "doesn't" similar for writing formal letters.
"The girl is subjected to a new test with Eva-00, which is interrupted by an attack by a new enemy, the fifth Angel Ramiel." It might be good to specify it is Rei although I think she is the only female character in this episode besides Misato and Ritsuko.
Production
"Once the first part of Shinji's emotional journey was over in the fourth episode" Emotional journey seems unfitting. I would suggest something like "Shinji's emotions were followed through the first four episode".
"di lei"? I'm kinda confused there. You mean that Italian word?
Wikilink Misato and Ritsuko
Cultural references, style and themes
"and jumping like a girl in love" From what I get phrasal verbs should not be used.
The third paragraph is quite big. I'd suggest splitting it.
Reception
PenPen's mention is kinda out of place in the middle of commentary about Rei and her relationships. Move it to another paragraph or sentence.
@TeenAngels1234: Other than that everything else is okay. I added the dates template at the top to make the references consistent when mentioning dates. Revise this and I'll pass the review. Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 16:49, 3 July 2021 (UTC)

@Tintor2: Thank you. Tried my best.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 21:01, 3 July 2021 (UTC)
Good work. You did every change. I'm passing the review. Keep up the good work.Tintor2 (talk) 22:32, 3 July 2021 (UTC)