# Talk:Tobruk (video game)

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 15:35, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

Lede
I would add 1941 before Siege of Tobruk and in Gameplay section.
Added in lead and gameplay JAGUAR  16:02, 4 January 2016 (UTC)
Gameplay
Mmm in reading 1st paragraph of Gameplay I feel like I'm reading the lede again, can you reword the lede or Gameplay to make it sound more different?
I agree, I've tried to reword both slightly JAGUAR  16:02, 4 January 2016 (UTC)
Background
"in what Cockayne admitted in a retrospective interview that "he took his eye off the ball"." -wording doesn't quite fit. Try "Following years of successful sales throughout the mid 1980s, Personal Software Services experienced financial difficulties, during a period where Cockayne later admitted that he "took his eye off the ball".
Rephrased to this, thanks! JAGUAR  16:02, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

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Good job!♦ Dr. Blofeld 16:15, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! JAGUAR  16:17, 4 January 2016 (UTC)