# Talk:Wichita Linebacker

Might be something to note for trivia: Sonoma State is without a football team. (Perhaps Hearst had a match with the Sonoma St. stickless lacrosse club?)
Someone needs to fix the image title. Not sure how to do that.

This review is transcluded from Talk:Wichita Linebacker/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 10:30, 20 August 2015 (UTC)
Will review this once I have completed another. Good888 (talk) 10:30, 20 August 2015 (UTC)
Lead

"and Veronica interacts with Dean O'Dell (Ed Begley, Jr.)." Expand on this slightly.
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"also features a guest appearance by Armie Hammer" Could be expanded by adding more of the guest appearances.
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Synopsis

"Veronica meets Weevil (Francis Capra), who is working at a car wash." During or after the Practise? Also I think you can change Veronica to She.
after done
"Veronica is called into the Dean’s office, and he threatens her to give up some names in relation to the sorority marijuana scandal." Why "the Dean's"? Also, what did he threaten to do if she didn't?
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First mention of Kurt in the Synopsis, so you should add his surname too.
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"Veronica suggests that he get a new playbook." Perhaps you could rewrite to: "Veronica's only suggestion is that he gets a new playbook."
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"Veronica convinces Keith (Enrico Colantoni) to hire Weevil." Perhaps a rewrite to: "Veronica convinces her father, Keith Mars (Enrico Colantoni), to hire Weevil for" What for actually?
an assistant job. Done.
"Veronica disguises herself as a cheerleader, but she fails to print a playbook." Again a rewrite similar to this: "In an attempt to print a playbook for Kurt, Veronica disguises herself as a cheerleader, but fails to print one."
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"Veronica is in the room during a debate between fraternity boys and feminists." In the same room when she tries to print a playbook?
nope. Done
The Arc states that Weevil was fired but here it states that Keith was.
That's confusing. Changed it. Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 02:05, 24 August 2015 (UTC)
"Veronica tells him the news before she gives him a job fixing the Dean’s car." The previous sentence makes it sound that EITHER Keith or Weevil were given that job.
"although Trish is." Who's Trish? The girlfriend?
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"However, she lost it." I would add "in the process" at the end.
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Link Kansas.
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"Weevil starts his new job." Add "as a Hearst janitor."
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"Veronica and Logan reconcile and kiss." I would add "their relationship"
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Reference 1 could be added to the end of this section.
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I also did some general cleanup and copyediting for this section. Let me know what you think. Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 02:05, 24 August 2015 (UTC)
Arc significance

No need for this. The Synopsis already states all of this.
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Production

"Marking Klemmer's eleventh writing credit, Enbom's eleventh writing credit" Since they both have the same amount of writing credits, change this sentence a bit.
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"The episode features the first appearance of recurring character Cyrus O'Dell (Ed Begley, Jr.), a recurring character for the third season." Remove the first "recurring character" Also, Begley player two characters in Dean and Cyrus?
No. He's the dean of Hearst College. I linked that article in the section in case anyone else had that confusion.
Reception

Compare the ratings with the previous episode.
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"He wrote a mixed review" Well he did give a 7/10. Perhaps you could add before "Despite this, he wrote a mixed review" or something like that.
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"Television Without Pity gave the episode a "C+" Expand on this a bit.
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State that Sepinwall wrote his review on his blog.
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References

Used Checklinks and no refs are broken.
Refs 1 and 12 need their publishers.
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Placing on hold for now. Good888 (talk) 18:43, 23 August 2015 (UTC)
@Good888: I believe that I have addressed all your concerns. Please let me know if there's anything more I can do. Johanna (aka BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 02:05, 24 August 2015 (UTC)

Good work! The article is much better now! Promoting to GA class. Good888 (talk) 08:12, 24 August 2015 (UTC)