# Talk:Typhoon Longwang

More impact, fix run-on sentences, fix external links. Jdorje 03:03, 14 January 2006 (UTC)

The almighty source collection begins...

Meteorological history
Japan Meteorological Agency Best Track
Annual Report on the Activities of the RSMC Tokyo - Typhoon Center 2005
Joint Typhoon Warning Center Annual Tropical Cyclone Report (Page 36)
Joint Typhoon Warning Center Best Track
Gary Padgett September 2005 summary
The Eyewall-Penetration Reconnaissance Observation of Typhoon Longwang (2005) with Unmanned Aerial Vehicle, Aerosonde
Analysis on Typhoon Longwang Intensity Changes Over the Ocean Via Satellite Data
Analysis on Structure of Typhoon Longwang Based on GPS Dropwindsonde Data
A Study on the Landfall Typhoon with Compact Structure in Taiwan
Strong Southward Transport Events Due to Typhoons in the Taiwan Strait
Precipitation Structure Changes of Landfalling Typhoons in the Taiwan Area and its Application on Short Term QPF (Maybe something on rainband structure....?)
Structural and Surface Features of Arc-Shaped Radar Echoes along an Outer Tropical Cyclone Rainband (Another possible rainband paper?)
Taiwan
Emergency Report 1
Emergency Report 2
Emergency Report 3
Emergency Report 4
The modification of the typhoon rainfall climatology model in Taiwan (Page 4: ~700mm observed)
The Geomorphometry of Rainfall-Induced Landslides in Taiwan Obtained by Airborne Lidar and Digital Photography (Something?)
Low-frequency spectra in harbour excited by short and random incident waves (Page 1: 7000 ton cargo vessel)
People's Republic of China
Joint impact of rainfall and tidal level on flood risk in a coastal city with a complex river network: a case study of Fuzhou City, China
Wind Disasters and Mitigation Activities in China – 149 killed, 7.478 billion RMB losses
China typhoon death toll reaches 15, dozens missing
Country reports
China WMO country report 2005
Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:43, 9 July 2013 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Typhoon Longwang/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 05:18, 26 July 2013 (UTC)

Not terribly related, but since Typhoon Longwang (disambiguation) only mentions two storms, is there even a need for the dab to exist?
"After reaching Category 4-equivalent intensity" - I'd say on what scale
You should probably put the note about the sustained just after the 110 mph). I thought it was a note about Taiwan.
"Large-scale evacuations took place in mainland China, with 684,860 people relocating." - this should probably be mentioned after you're finished talking about Taiwan. This would imply they're in the same country, and to maintain a neutral point of view, I think you should keep everything Taiwan-related together.
"Despite the intensity of the storm, damage was relatively limited." - I would add a "there" somewhere there.
"Two people lost their lives, 73 were injured and damage" - add a comma after injured
"the JTWC also classified the system as a tropical depression" - here, I would add the JTWC number.
"Situated to the southwest of a ridge, the depression tracked slowly west-northwest" - this is right after you said the system was upgraded to Longwang. Was this sentence misplaced? Or did you mean to say "the storm"
"A temporary turn northwest occurred on September 26 as Longwang approached a weakness in the ridge previously steering it west-northwest" - eek, a bit of a run-on. I would change the end to "which had previously steered west-northward." But your call.
"By this time, prominent banding features were present around the storm." - you already said it had banding features a paragraph prior. What changed?
"Now tropical depression" - kinda awkward way to start the final MH sentence.
"For southern Taiwan, the main risk was fresh water flooding and 15 rivers were placed under high alert while 340 more were under moderate alert. " - I think this could be split in two.
"As the storm made landfall, 37 shelters opened across the island" - the shelters opened at the exact moment the storm made landfall?
"Guangdong Provinces" - if you're mentioning several, the "provinces" should be lower case. Also, don't think that should be part of the Guangdong link.
"Public transportation across the province was temporarily suspended as well. - which province?
"battered the islands of Ishigaki Iriomote" - are the last two things one island or two? If two, add a comma
"Four people sustained minor injuries in Ishigaki City from falling" - falling where? Down a cliff?
"nearly 1,000 people sought refuge in shelters" - you said the total was 906 in the preps section. Why mention this in the impact section?
"Chufeng grapes" - any chance for a link?
"struck Mainland China" - any reason for capital "Mainland"?
Find better "see also" articles. We don't link to List of tropical cyclones anymore, and the timeline isn't that helpful. I'd recommend any other typhoons that struck Taiwan and China. Perhaps Typhoon Herb, which was similarly deadly?
All in all, good job. Just minimal stuff before I'll pass it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  05:18, 26 July 2013 (UTC)

I believe I've addressed everything. Thanks for the review Hink!! Cyclonebiskit (talk) 16:59, 26 July 2013 (UTC)