# Talk:Tropical Storm Harvey (2011)

The TCR is out, Harvey has been upgraded to 55kt and it is also stated that it was a Tropical Storm when it made landfall in the southern Bay of Campeche. Harvey TCR
WeathernerdPR (talk) 21:08, 2 December 2011 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)

"Tropical Storm Harvey was a tropical storm that formed and dissipated during the 2011 Atlantic hurricane season." REally? That's as boring as it gets? YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Done. STO12 (talk) 04:57, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
"Harvey was also the last in a record-breaking string of eight consecutive storms that reached only tropical storm status. Hurricane Irene, the next storm to form after Harvey, reached hurricane status. Harvey developed from a westward-moving tropical wave that emerged off the coast of Africa. " delink Africa, major place. YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Done. STO12 (talk) 05:02, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
"The origins of Tropical Storm Harvey trace back to a westward-moving Atlantic tropical wave that is estimated to have passed over Dakar, Senegal, at 0000 UTC on August 11, 2011.[3]" dleink Atlantic per above.
Done. STO12 (talk) 16:24, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
" At 1800 UTC on August 18, the system was designated Tropical Depression Eight, with maximum sustained winds of 35 mph (56 km/h) and a minimum pressure of 1006 mb.[2][16]" inHg? YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Done. STO12 (talk) 16:34, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
"Continuing to deepen, Tropical Depression Eight attained tropical storm status during the afternoon and was named Harvey in an intermediate advisory at 1800 UTC.[18] " what is an intermediate advisory? YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
An Intermediate Advisory is an advisory that is released before an official advisory. No change needed. STO12 (talk) 04:52, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
The layman does not know that. YE  Pacific Hurricane 04:53, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
What is a "layman"? STO12 (talk) 04:57, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
The average reader. YE  Pacific Hurricane 05:15, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
I see, but it is good information, is there a link to information on an intermediate advisory? STO12 (talk) 16:21, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Link it to National Hurricane Center. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:54, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Where on that article should I link it to? STO12 (talk) 17:07, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Intermediate advisory. YE  Pacific Hurricane 04:00, 12 November 2012 (UTC)
" Adverse conditions on the island began on August 15 and had mostly cleared by August 18, although residual shower activity remained possible throughout the day.[21]" redundant to MH, and since it was only a TL when it moved through the area, stuff like this can led to confusion. YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Do I need to remove it? Or replace it? Or what? STO12 (talk) 16:34, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Remove. YE  Pacific Hurricane 04:00, 12 November 2012 (UTC)
There should be well more impact here. The writing is really good, but it is not comprehensive enough to meet GA status at this time.
What do I need to change to make it better? STO12 (talk) 16:26, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
It was more of a general statement. YE  Pacific Hurricane 04:00, 12 November 2012 (UTC)
Cut back on See also stuff, only the Other storms named Harvey and the Timeline of the 2011 AHS should be their IMO. YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Done. STO12 (talk) 04:57, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Ref 2 is a bare url. YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Should I remove it? Or replace it? Or what? STO12 (talk) 16:37, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Expand it so it is not a bare url :P YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:54, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Add author first names. YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
To which references? STO12 (talk) 16:39, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
All the NHC ones. User:Mitchazenia/Sandbox 7 gives the first names. YE  Pacific Hurricane
Your link is broken. D: STO12 (talk) 17:07, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Not anymore :) YE  Pacific Hurricane 17:10, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Don't use staff writer on the refs. YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Which refs in particular? STO12 (talk) 16:39, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Refs 21, 23, 24, and 25. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:54, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
The TCR is not used at all in the article. YE  Pacific Hurricane 02:32, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
I'm sorry, but what is a TCR? STO12 (talk) 16:39, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
TCR=Tropical Cyclone Report. YE  Pacific Hurricane
What should I add that to? STO12 (talk) 17:07, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
The MH. YE  Pacific Hurricane 17:10, 21 October 2012 (UTC)
Haven't been any updates since YE's notes on the 11th; should this be failed? Wizardman 17:31, 1 December 2012 (UTC)

I'm going to fail it. It's not complete yet. The MH skips from development to remnants. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  16:13, 4 December 2012 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 01:50, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

Source for lede sentence?
Done--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
"Landslides in the state of Chiapas damaged 36 homes and In Veracruz" - were you going with something else? Or was it just a typo putting "In" there?
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
You might wanna mention the two other deaths in Mexico unrelated to landslides, and try finding how they happened.
Mentioned the two other deaths, but couldn't find out what happened.--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
"The National Hurricane Center (NHC) classified the system as an "invest" on August 11. " - we usually don't indicate this. Any reason you did? And it's not backed up by source.
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
In general, can you cut down on the first MH paragraph? There's no need for that much info on a wave.
Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
"A low-level circulation pattern subsequently became identifiable, and the developing center of circulation was tentatively pinpointed roughly 100 mi (160 km) east-northeast of Cape Gracias a Dios.[12] At 1800 UTC on August 18, the system was designated as Tropical Depression Eight" - oh god that first sentence. Please merge and simplify :D
Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
"and found a well-defined center of circulation slightly northeast of where it was originally assumed to be. Observations from the flight yielded data that suggested the depression was only slightly below tropical storm status. With the new center location, forecasts were adjusted to allow for more time over water. As a result, more intensification than previously expected was possible. " - is any of this important?
Guess not.--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
"remained on its westward course and was expected to move west-northwestward throughout its duration" - you could simplify by just saying "on its general westward course", since W vs. WNW is pretty marginal.
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
"Continuing to deepen, Tropical Depression Eight was upgraded to Tropical Storm Harvey at 1200 UTC on August 19" - not true. Operationally, it was named at 1800 UTC. So either say it was upgraded to a tropical storm at 1200 UTC, or say when the NHC actually named it.
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
" to move southwards, slowly." - "to move slowly southwards"?
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
Ref 15 does not cover that content listed
I'm gonna remove that stuff--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
Any way you could cut down on the info in the eastern Caribbean? It wasn't technically Harvey, and it's not like the effects were that major.
Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)
Unlike the above, the storm passed just offshore Honduras. Where is the impact in that country?
"A "yellow alert" was declared for five departments of Honduras: Gracias a Dios, Colón, Atlantida, Cortés, and Islas de la Bahia. Two other departments, Yoro and Olancho." - what's with the last two?
When I went to correct that, I noticed it was an epic fail. :P --12george1 (talk) 03:19, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
"As a precautionary measure, shelters were prepared in case of an evacuation" - think you can cut the first four words.
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:19, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
Any rainfall total for Belize?
3.4 inches in Belmopan--12george1 (talk) 16:51, 10 October 2013 (UTC)
Have you used the WMO report? It might help for various countries.
"isolated the town of Xaltianguis from surrounding areas" - the last three words aren't needed (implied by "isolated")
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:19, 9 October 2013 (UTC)
In general, it seems that most of the article was written in the days following the storm, without care for finding additional information. I'll leave this on hold for a few days, but it definitely needs some work. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  01:50, 6 October 2013 (UTC)