# Talk:Operation Nordseetour

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 21:22, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Article title should italicise Nordseetour, suggest {{DISPLAYTITLE:Operation ''Noordseetour''}}.
I was wondering how to do that - thanks, and done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"with heavy cruiser seeking" cruisers?  or "with the heavy cruiser"?
'The' - added Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"in France, Admiral" that link for France is far too much of an easter egg.
True, tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"when she attacked on the morning of 25 December." she attacked the following morning.
"later on 25 December, and" later that day.
Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"arrived in Brest two days later" -> arrived in Brest on 27 December.
Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"The British Royal Navy strengthened" no need for British.
Removed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
WS5A or WS 5A?
WS 5A, fixed
"The Kriegsmarine's (German Navy's) plans" -> "The plans of the Kriegsmarine (German Navy)"
Tweaked along those lines Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"Submarines and" U-Boats?
Same thing really, so I've deliberately not used 'U-boat's
"The British Royal Navy anticipated" no need for British.
Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"in April 1939. In February 1940" repetitive.  Perhaps "The following February"?
Oops, tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"fatally damaged" can fatally damage something that's not alive?  Maybe critically damaged?
Done Nick-D (talk)
"the Home Fleet during" what's that?
Tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"German air force" you had Germany Navy so I assume this should be German Air Force
Yep, adjusted Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
Kriegsmarine's -> Kriegsmarine's
Fixed, I think Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"German: "North Sea Tour" German is overlinked.  Template should give you instruction on how to force it to delink.
Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"failed to understand that" interpret perhaps?
Tweaked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
Why link Malta but not Greenland?
Unlinked Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"The carriers" link.
Oops, I thought I already had linked aircraft carriers - fixed, and improved the wording Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"Hipper's secondary armament fired" overlinked.
Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"them.[31][20]" ref order.
Fixed Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
"December Admiral Hipper's" comma after Dec.
Done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
Roskill ref needs en-dash in year range.
And Steury (spaced en-dash).
And Wragg.
All done Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 13:19, 4 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks a lot for this review. Nick-D (talk) 04:25, 5 September 2021 (UTC)