# Talk:The Head and the Hair

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Reviewer: Staxringold talkcontribs 20:19, 22 April 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS): 
Couple things:
The infobox image caption needs fixing to make it clear for an outsider who is Liz and who is Jenna. I would say "Liz and 'The Head' (left) with Jenna and 'The Hair' (right)"
Done. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:31, 22 April 2010 (UTC)
The lead summary has a little bit too flowery language, in my opinion. "one a cerebral nerd... and the other a gorgeous hunk" could be written more encyclopedically.
"A nerd and handsome man"?
"Things end abruptly, when" No comma needed.
Removed.
Really the whole second part of the Liz/Hair plot section needs some reworking. "Liz tries to go home as she is feeling freaked out" for example tells you nothing about why she was feeling freaked out, not to mention it's not particularly encyclopedically written.
I think I got it. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:31, 22 April 2010 (UTC)
"due to a publisher the next day, but he " No comma needed
Removed.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

As with the other review, why no cultural references section? For example, the article currently makes no mention of the tons of jokes with Brian Williams. Particularly notable since Williams returns multiple times in the series. The fake number Tracy gives out at clubs is William's #, and he runs into the MSNBC studio (where Jack's new lady from this season works) and yells "NIGHTLY NEWS RULES!". Plus a reference to Little People, Big World (or some other "show about midgets"). And that's just from about 1 minute of the episode.
Added info. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:31, 22 April 2010 (UTC)
Also there has to be more info on Radioman's cameo out there for the production section.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 
On hold.

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