# Talk:United Arab Emirates at the 2012 Summer Olympics

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Reviewer: MrLinkinPark333 (talk · contribs) 18:16, 11 July 2020 (UTC)

Hello! It's been awhile since I've done a GA review. I've seen this one wasn't claimed by someone, so I thought I do it especially since I've reviewed a few countries at X Olympics articles before. As per usual, if you have any questions/comments, please feel free to reply here in the review. For the below table, I'll use it for my initial passthrough. Question marks are for points that require a little bit of work while red marks are for ones that require a lot of work. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:16, 11 July 2020 (UTC)


### Lead Y
Question of whether it was 26 or 27 athletes per Ali Mabkhout. Unless the number only counts the ones who were selected first, and not the alternative who played later?
Dealt with since the alternative isn't counted. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:22, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
The highest UAE result was 9th by weightlifter Khadija Mohammad, not the 13th placed shooters.Y
Fixed MWright96 (talk) 20:00, 11 July 2020 (UTC)
Note to self: Will need to recheck after a analysis of the entire article


### Infobox Y
The United Arab Emirates National Olympic Committee's website is now at this website per the IOC reference in the background section.Y
Changed MWright96 (talk) 20:00, 11 July 2020 (UTC)
There were 27 competitors for UAE, not 26, if Ali Mabkhout is counted. However, a source would be to be verified in the Football section first before the number is adjusted.Y
The FIFA source says Ali Mabkhout was an alternate player MWright96 (talk) 20:00, 11 July 2020 (UTC)
Yep. I'm not doubting he was an alternate player. The problem is that note c in the football roster doesn't verify he was in the final group stage match. I was going to state it there in the football section, but I guess I'll mention it here too. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:12, 11 July 2020 (UTC)
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 08:22, 12 July 2020 (UTC)
As Mabkhout is verifed to have played, is he not counted as part of the total because he was an alternate like the other 3?Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:18, 12 July 2020 (UTC)
That is correct MWright96 (talk) 19:40, 12 July 2020 (UTC)


### Judo Y
"He was the second Judoka after Saeed Rashid Al Qubais" - Judoka requires to be switched to a lowercase j.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"but this was upgraded to a direct entry through his participation in the Abu Dhabi Grand Prix" - yes but specifically he had enough points during the Grand Prix over the years.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
" extreme sensitivity to light" - needs a bit of rewording as its word for word matchY
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"He took part in the second round of the men's 66kg competition" - Could his bye in the first round be mentioned with a source?Y
Added MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
Also, Gulf News said he competed in the first round, which contradicts the judo table. I think the table is right so an extra source is needed to verify he competed in the second round. You can replace the Sport360 one if it's easier for you as it was published before his match.Y
Changed MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"and faced world number 10" - I think "world number 10" could be reworded a tiny bit for limited wording.Y
Changed MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"Al-Derei lost when Awad caused an elbow injury" - technically he lost because of the ippon. So, this sentence could be reordered to: elbow injury, lost after ippon.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"that restricted his movement a minute after the game commenced" - I don't see the arm twist happen a minute after per Gulf News, but it was right from the beginning of the match. A tiny tweak needed to when exactly the arm twist happened. You could drop "a minute" if you want for a quick solution.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"and executed a match-winning Ippon" - close paraphrasing of The National that needs fixing.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
Ippon is fine when you're rewording as that's the match move, but it doesn't require a capital letter.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"He said post-match that Awad's grip was too tight but was proud to have competed in the Olympics." - this seems like two separate facts. Gulf News's quote mentions the arm injury/happy to be part of Olympics in separate parts of the article. His quote in The National says he was happy even though he didn't win. So, these two setences might need to be separated as they arent connected.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"Awad's grip was too tight" - this closely resembles Al-Derei's quote in Gulf News and requires a tiny rewording to avoid a direct match.Y
Changed the wording MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
"but was proud to have competed in the Olympics." - closely resembles in The National. If you reworded "proud", it'd be fine as the rest isnt unique enough.Y
Removed MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
Fair enough. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 01:47, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
--MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 23:08, 12 July 2020 (UTC)
Second check after checking the above changes Y:

"at ExCeL London on 29 July and faced 10th ranked judoka in the world Ahmed Awad of Egypt" - could this be separated into a separate source (while making it grammatically correct)? The previous part "in the Round of 32 of the men's 66kg competition," sounds choppy with a comma before "at Excel London".  --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 01:39, 14 July 2020 (UTC) Note: see next point.
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:26, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Almost done with this point. Slight typo with "She faced 10th ranked judoka" -> "He faced 10th ranked judoka".Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:58, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
D'oh, now fixed MWright96 (talk) 20:04, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
No worries! I almost missed it too :) --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:09, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
"and that his opponent was a deserving winner." - I suggest using a different word than "deserving" as its an unique word similar from Al-Derei's quote in Gulf News. Note: see below
Changed MWright96 (talk) 07:26, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
I think "worthy" is used in the wrong way, as worthy alone means notable. I think you mean "was worthy of his win" as it means earned.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:58, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 20:04, 18 July 2020 (UTC)


### Judo table Y
Similarily, the Gulf News source needs to be swapped to show Al-Derei's bye in the first round, and the points in the second round.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 23:08, 12 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
Great find! --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 01:48, 14 July 2020 (UTC)


### Shooting Y
P1 Y:

"He attained qualification for the skeet competition" - Gulf News isn't specific that Saeed Al-Maktoum qualified for the skeet competition, just that he qualified for the Olympics. So, either the source could be swapped or another could be added to specify that he qualified for the skeet event.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"long-term training camp Italy before the Games." - word for word of "long-term training camp" that needs rephrasingY
Rephrased MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Also "long-term training camp Italy" -> long-term training camp in Italy (after the above is rephrased)Y
Added MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"On 30 July, Al-Maktoum took part in the qualification round of the skeet tournament at the Royal Artillery Barracks." - need a source to show the qualification was held at the Royal Artillery Barracks.Y
Also, the qualifications for the skeet event were on 31 July, not 30 July per NY Times.Y
Corrected MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"and rushing himself on occasion" - "rushing himself" is very close to Saeed's quote in Sport360, which means it'd need to be rephrased.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 21:17, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
P2 Y

"Juma Al-Maktoum was 28 years old at the London Games" - needs a source/swap source to show he was 28 at the times of the games as Gulf News doesnt state it.Y
Added and corrected age of athlete MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"He qualified for the Olympic double trap tournament by winning the gold medal in the discipline" -> He qualified for the Olympic double trap tournament after winning the gold medal in the discipline (see P3).Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"went to a training camp outside of Milan in Italy" - similar to the Gulf News source that needs a bit of rewording for limited wording.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"outside of Milan in Italy" -> outside of Milan (to prevent redundancy). You can wikilink Milan if you wish but not a priority.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"He said of his chances in London," - I'm not 100% sure if that summarizes his quote correctly. From my understanding, he was happy to participate and that he had no issues with the training. Perhaps another phrase is needed to introduce his quote before the Olympics started. But, I could be reading too much into it.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
I see you literally used what I said :P --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:17, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"On 2 August Al-Maktoum competed in the qualification round" - comma after August please.Y
Added MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"after he scored a respective 42, 45 and 46 points" - I think respective is an incorrect word here as it pertains to two or more people. So, "a respective" can be dropped as the rest of the sentence is good.Y
Removed MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"four less points than the two lowest scoring shooters" - The lowest qualifiers had 137 points, while Juma Al-Maktoum had 133. The lowest score was 114 by the Croatian shooter, so you need the lowest qualifiers, not the lowest overall score. Up to you if you want to repeat "the two lowest scoring qualifiers" again or use a different phrasing.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"and was not able to advance to the final of the event" - Olympics.org doesn't mention the final, just who qualified and didn't. I think mainly because they're retesting the London 2012 samples.Y
Replaced with Olympedia MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
P3 Y 

"Dhaher Al-Aryani was making his Olympic debut" - "making his Olympic debut" is word for word with the Sport 360 source. Slight rephrase needed.Y:
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"He qualified for the Games for the men's trap event through his participation in the 2012 Asian Shooting Championships" - ISSF contradicts this with this link in the Quota Place and Minimum Qualification Score sections for several reasons. 1) While Al-Aryani had won a qualification spot with the Quota Place, its up to the country's team to send their competitors to the Olympics/Youth Olympic Games. 2) Al-Aryani and the other shooters would only be allowed to receive a Quota Place if they scored a minimum amount of points delegated by the ISSF. So, just participating in the Asian Shooting Championships would not guarantee that he'd enter the Olympics either. Note: see below.
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Only additional point is that the How to qualify for the games should be adjusted to this link, as is shows the 2012 qualification (the current link was for 2008).Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:49, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
On a different point, "He qualified for the Games for the men's trap event" -> "He qualified for the Games in the men's trap event" (as it sounds redundadnt saying "for" twice. Yes i'm being nitpicky.) Note:: see below
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
After the new edits: "He qualified for the men's trap event through using a quota place" -> "He qualified for the men's trap event by using a quota place" - YMrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:37, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
"The team's trap shooting coach Rustam Yambulatov said that hot weather would help Al-Aryani." + true, but this was mentioned by Yambulatov if the Olympics became hot. At the time of the shooting event, it wasn't hot but mild. Note: see below.
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
I just realized that this sentence is out of place in terms of chronological order. Yambulatov's quote was during the trap qualification on August 6th (it mentions that Al Aryani already had 65 points). Therefore, I think this quote by Yambulatov should be reordered after mentioning the dates of the trap qualification but before mentioning his overall two-day score. Your rephrase is alright, just needs to be reordered. Note: --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:34, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
Almost there. "said on 6 August Al-Aryani would be helped" -> said on 6 August that Al-Aryani would be helped (for grammar) Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:06, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
Changed MWright96 (talk) 20:13, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
"He accumulated 17 points less than the two lowest ranked qualifiers" - 15 points not 17 as the Top 6 scorers qualified. The lowest qualifers had 122 points in comparasion to Al-Aryani's 107.Y
Corrected MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Table Y

Same issue with Juma Al-Maktoum's Olympic.org not mentioning the final.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 00:34, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Replaced with Olympedia MWright96 (talk) 07:21, 14 July 2020 (UTC)


### Swimming Y
"was granted a universality place...for the men's 100 metre breaststroke" - this is very long especially after the comma of "who at the age of 24 was competing in his first Olympic Games,". I suggest making the universality spot a different source.Y
Done and rewritten the sentence MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
"from the world governing body of swimming FINA" - Swimswam doesn't mention FINA is the "world governing body of swimming" so this could be dropped.Y
Removed MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
"after his best time of 1 minute, 4.60 seconds" - the PDF file doesn't state it was his best time, so "best" could be dropped.Y
added source to say it was his personal best and the event he set it at MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
In terms of the sources, this FINA source at page 5 contradicts the SwimSwam source in terms of the FINA invitation time (it was published months after the SwimSwam source). So, it's possible the time was updated as the qualifying time is the same, but the invitation time is different). So, both the time and time difference from B class would need to be updated.Y
Updated MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
"Alternatively, the Universality places PDF doesn't have a date on it nor say these times were for the Olympics. So, I think this source needs to be replaced to show Al-Besher gained a universality place and has his time.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
I see Swimming World links to that PDF, so it's fine now. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:25, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"He attended training camps in Málaga, Spain and London, United Kingdom" - at the time of the Sport360 source, he hadn't trained in London yet, only in Spain. So London could be removed.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
Also, while adjusting the sentence, "training camp in Malaga" would need to be tweaked for limited wording.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
""So God willing, if I clock 1min 3sec or 1min 2sec, I will be very happy in London" - this quote comes later in the Sport 360 source than ""Inshallah, I’ll clock another personal best in London. I’m expecting a surprise there" and is not in the same quote. Therefore, I suggest either separating the quotes or only keeping one of them.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
"since the competition's formal allowed only the quickest 16 competitors to enter the semi-finals" - Do you mean format instead of formal?Y
Changed MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
Also. the London 2012 source doesn't specify semi-finals, but that the qualifiers would advance to the "next phase". So, another source would be needed to show the semi-finals happened right after the qualifiers.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 23:19, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Swapped out source MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)
Table Y

London 2012 does not show that  Al Besher failed to reach the semi-finals/finals. I recommend swapping out the source.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 23:19, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


### Weightlifting Y
"Khadija Mohammed participated on the United Arab Emirates' behalf" -> "Khadija Mohammed participated on the United Arab Emirates's behalf"Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"at the 2012 Asian Weightlifting Championships in South Korea in April that year" - I think it's a bit redundant saying "in" twice. So, I think this could be simplified like the Asian Shooting Championships sentence in the first paragraph of the shooting section. Note: see below.
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
Bit redundant saying April 2012 as it's already mentioned that the championships were held in 2012.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:38, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 05:56, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
"the first hijab or head scarf wearing athlete" - a slight reword of Deseret News needed for limited wording for the "first hijab or head scarf" part.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"Financial issues and delayed payment of salaries left her unprepared." - I'm not sure this is 100% neutral. Kahleej Times said her preparation wasn't good, but that the money issues made it more bad. So, while she already had bad preparation beforehand, the money issues were additional reasons why her preparation was not good, not the sole reasons. Note: see Additional comments section.Y
Reworded MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
This is also contradicted by Khadija vows to make a statement for UAE women, as it says she trained before the event. Note: see below.
Added MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
Only Gulf News mentions her training, not Kahleej Times. So you don't need the other source.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 01:27, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 05:56, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
Alternativelly, "delayed payment of salaries" is similar to Kahleej Times that needs rewording.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"Mohammed said that she wanted to venture to London to make "a statement on behalf of women from the UAE and the Gulf countries" and inspire young girls to take up weightlifting." - apart from the quoted part ("a statement"), the rest of this sentence looks similar to Mohammad's quotes in the Gulf News source. Therefore, they need rephrasing as they're not being quoted (before and after "a statement on behalf of women from the UAE and the Gulf countries"). Note: see next point.
Rewritten MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
Almost there. If you reword "young girls", you'd be set with this point.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 01:33, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 05:56, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
"During the event's snatch phase, Mohammed was given three attempts, successfully lifting 51 kg (112 lb) of weight before failing at 53 kg (117 lb)." - Sports360 doesn't specify the three attempts for the snatch, only the clean and jerk. Extra/new source needed for the snatch event only.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
Also, "successfully lifting" and "failing" should be changed to past tense, as "Mohammed was given three attempts" is past tense.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"before failing at 53kg" - word for word of Sport360 that needs to be changed. "Failing" could easily be changed to fixed this.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"in the clean and jerk phrase." -> I think you mean phase.Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"Overall, the combination of Mohammed's highest scores in snatch (51) and clean and jerk (62) yielded a score of 113 points" - I don't think you need (51) and (62) as it's already mentioned, and it sounds like side comments.Y
Removed MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
"152 points behind the gold medallist Lidia Valentín of Spain" - I think mentioning who won the gold loses its focus from the UAE and changes it to Spain. I think this should be removed. If you want to incorporate Note E into the prose, you could add it after "She ranked ninth in the event" as it'd be a very small sentence.Y
Removed MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
Table: Y

Olympedia has Mohammad's rank in both the Snatch and Clean & Jerk as 9th, not 12th. This was after the retests that bumped her from 12th to 9th.Y
--MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:05, 15 July 2020 (UTC)

Changed MWright96 (talk) 07:29, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
Additional comments per past edits Y 

"While she had some training prior to the Games" - Gulf News doesn't specify she only had some training, so "While she had some training" -> "While she had trained"Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 05:56, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
"were additional reasons that it became worse" -> "were reasons why it became worse" (there were only 2 reasons why it became worse. Yes I said additional reasons in the above section).Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 05:56, 18 July 2020 (UTC)


### Images and captions Y
As the Royal Artillery Barracks and ExCel London are both buildings, I think they require Freedom of Panorama-United Kingdom licenses like the one included with the London Aquatics Centre picture.Y
Added MWright96 (talk) 19:00, 11 July 2020 (UTC)
While the Ismail Mattar picture was uploaded by an user who is now blocked, I think this picture is fine as the only search results with TinEye are mirrors.
where Humaid Al-Derei took part in judo competition -> where Humaid Al-Derei took part in the judo competition --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 18:16, 11 July 2020 (UTC)Y
Corrected MWright96 (talk) 19:00, 11 July 2020 (UTC)
Just realized this: "The Royal Artillery Barracks, where three Emirati shooters competed in the men's double trap shooting competition." -> The Royal Artillery Barracks, where three Emirati shooters competed in the shooting competitions. (As UAE was in the trap, double trap and skeet). --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 21:19, 13 July 2020 (UTC)Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
"The London Aquatics Centre, where Mubrarak Al-Besher competed in swimming events." -> The London Aquatics Centre, where Mubrarak Al-Besher competed in the 100 m breaststroke (as he only was in the breaststroke, not multiple events). --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 21:21, 13 July 2020 (UTC)Y
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:07, 14 July 2020 (UTC)


### Sources Y
I'm not 100% sure about Sports360.Y
It's a daily sports newspaper published in the UAE. MWright96 (talk) 20:00, 11 July 2020 (UTC)
I'm waiting for the result with the Fox news RFC here. Should be closed within a few days.
Update: Fox News RFC closure is now extended to 2 weeks as of July 13th. So, I think as the RFC was closed for comments on July 7th, it'd be closed on July 21st with this extension. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 01:56, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Have decided to replace the Fox News article with the same AP one from Deseret News MWright96 (talk) 15:03, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
That was a good idea to switch it out instead of having to wait for the RFC. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:23, 18 July 2020 (UTC)


### Last minute checks Y
This is for stuff that I hadn't spotted before, especially with grammar.

Football: "Its first match was between Uruguay" -> Its first match was against Uruguay --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 23:26, 12 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 07:08, 13 July 2020 (UTC)Y
Judo: It might be worth mentioning when Al Qubaisi, the first ever judoika, competed for UAE. Otherwise, you could drop Al Qubaisi if its not worth comparing (2008 to 2016) and just keep that Al Derei was UAE's second ever judo competitor. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 05:50, 13 July 2020 (UTC) Note: see below.
Reworded the sentence MWright96 (talk) 07:08, 13 July 2020 (UTC)
Sentence would be to be rephrased as "second judoka to represent the United Arab Emirate" is very close to The National source.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 19:49, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
Done MWright96 (talk) 19:59, 18 July 2020 (UTC)
Athletics: do you happen to know which stadium/building the events were held? This is the only sport that doesnt mention the location. If not, then it's okay to skip it.Y --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 23:22, 14 July 2020 (UTC)
Added MWright96 (talk) 06:49, 15 July 2020 (UTC)


### Overall
@MWright96: I think I've checked everything. I'll have to reread all of this after I check the Swimming edits, and once the weightlifting issues are resolved. I especially will have to recheck for any other grammar/spelling issues and if I missed any neturality/manual of style spots, plus save the lead for last. Overall:

Criteria that passes: has reflist, article is stable, no issue with manual of style, main topics are covered,
Small issues: One sentence I believe isnt't netural (Mohammed being unprepared in comparison to what the Kahleej Times/Gulf News sources said), few points where too much detail needed to be removed (i.e. mentioning who won the gold in weightlifting)
Medium issues: Question of whether Fox News is reliable per the ongoing RFC, additional Panorama licenses needed to be added for two UK buildings, Captions needed to be updated for grammar/factual accuracy, additional spelling/grammar in ssections (i.e. formal -> format, phrase -> phase).
Big issues: Original Research in terms of sources not verifying content/not 100% accurate to what source says, Copyvio of word for word exact phrasing/close paraphrasing of content.
As most of this was already completed while I was reviewing, I'm willing to put this on hold for a week (until July 22nd) then check from there. --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:41, 15 July 2020 (UTC)

@MrLinkinPark333: Have addressed all points raised above. Awaiting other points that need addressing. MWright96 (talk) 09:11, 16 July 2020 (UTC)
@MWright96: Alrighty. I believe you are all set. I wasn't expecting that Fox News RFC to effect this nomination lol! But, I saw you swapped it out so you didn't have to wait. I would have extended the hold if I had to because of the source, but that didn't need to happen. Promoting to GA. Well done! --MrLinkinPark333 (talk) 20:25, 18 July 2020 (UTC)