# Talk:Sunroom Nite

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Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 22:48, 28 April 2022 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article. Its coverage seems appropiate but there are one or two stuff that I think needs to be fixed before passing it:

The lead is kinda small, failing WP:Lead. Try at least writing two paragraphs even it's minor content.
Done.
The nihongo in the plot might better fit as a note since covers a lot.
I think adding notes for names might get confusing, given the existing note for Serge's name; adding more would mean that two separate notes would be attached to his name, which feels excessive.
Production: give more focus to girl's manga rather than the Japanese titles like shojo to make it easier to understand.
"Shōjo manga" is the proper name for this category of manga, so I'm not sure if there's a workaround here. Personally, I think it would be more confusing to oscillate between using "shōjo manga" and "girls' manga", rather than just maintaining consistency throughout the article. I personally don't think the term is excessively used; "shōjo" appears without a gloss just four times in the Production section (six including its use in the proper title Bessatsu Shōjo Comic).
@Morgan695: That's all. Remember to ping me.Tintor2 (talk) 22:48, 28 April 2022 (UTC)

@Tintor2: Hi, reply above. Morgan695 (talk) 23:30, 28 April 2022 (UTC)