# Talk:Tropical Storm Thelma

More impact and intro. Jdorje 19:44, 11 January 2006 (UTC)

Ormoc City disaster
Ormoc rises from flash flood tragedy
Reconnaissance Report: Flooding Resulting From Typhoon Uring In Ormoc City, Leyte Province, The Philippines
The Politics of Disaster
Ormocanons commemorate 18th year flash flood
ReliefWeb
Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:56, 3 May 2013 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Tropical Storm Thelma/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)

"Tropical Storm Thelma (also known as Tropical Storm Uring in the Philippines) was the deadliest tropical cyclone in Philippine history, killing at least 5,081 people." link to History of the Philippines. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Linked Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"(hPa; 29.29 inHg. " someone forgot their parenthesis. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"Outside of Ormoc City, a further 159 people were killed across Leyte and Negros Occidental. " no need for "futher" since you mention it is outside of the city IMO. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"Total losses amounted to $27.67 million." year? YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Added a note Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"A total of $5.8 million worth of grants and materials was provided collectively in the international relief effort" was to wore here, right? YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
" Joint Typhoon Warning Center (JTWC).[3] " don't include the "(JTWC)" in part of the link. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
" Early on November 1, the Japan Meteorological Agency (JMA) began monitoring the system " see above. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"On November 4, both the JTWC and JMA upgraded the system to a tropical storm, with the latter assigning it the name Thelma.[3][4]" link to tropical cyclone naming. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"The hardest hit region was Leyte where more than 4,000 people lost their lives." comma before "where". YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"A total of 598,454 people were affected by the storm across the Philippines.[11] An estimated 43,000 people were left homeless.[12]" mind combing these sentences. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"covering an area of 4,567 hectares," convert the unit to acres as well. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
" is only 3.3 percent forested" it still is today? YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
No information on that is provided. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"Altogether, the rains were twice as heavy as the land could handle and the many landslips doubled the volume of fluids.[16]" no need for "the" after "and". YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Removed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
"Roughly 2,500 people lived on this reclaimed land prior to the flood. The majority of fatalities took place along the banks of the river, with most drowning or being buried in mud or debris." I'd combine this to sentences with something like ";consequentially". YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
That would create a misleading statement which would imply that the majority (though somehow less than half) took place along that reclaimed land. Opting not to do this. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
Where does Thelma fall in the deadlist typhoons. There should at least be a template of that.
Our template isn't up-to-snuff. From what I can tell, it's not in the top ten. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
In the aftermath, cut back on the uses of "by [insert date]". YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Not sure how to go about this. Most things are date-specific. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
", and the governments of Canada, New Zealand." to ", as well as the governments of Canada and New Zealand". YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)
Done Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)
In all, it is pretty good. YE Pacific Hurricane 19:51, 1 June 2013 (UTC)

Pardon the late response. I kept getting distracted from fixing this up. Thanks for the review YE Cyclonebiskit (talk) 18:02, 8 June 2013 (UTC)