# Talk:Women's Boat Race 2014

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Reviewer: Relentlessly (talk · contribs) 14:01, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

I'll do this over the next few days. Relentlessly (talk) 14:01, 30 April 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for the review.  The format makes it difficult to respond directly to your concerns but I will do my best in due course.  The Rambling Man (talk) 18:33, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
Rephrased the clumsy phrasing.
Reduced clauses down to two.
Don't think there's a need to say all the locations of the previous races, that's covered by the main Women's Boat Race article.
"saw" is perfectly normal in British English.
I've removed "Inter-varsity".
Split the multi-clause sentence.
Complied with your suggestion.
All other reviews of the 162 races I've got to GA are keen on seeing the umpire in the lead.
More responses shortly.  The Rambling Man (talk) 18:53, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

Linked trial boat the main Boat Race article.
Linked Eight (rowing) in the lead.
I'm unclear if I've covered everything, but please let me know.  Thanks for the review!  The Rambling Man (talk) 19:31, 4 May 2015 (UTC)

Apologies, The Rambling Man, if the review is hard to follow. I'm just using the templates suggested here; I'll use a different approach in future. (Any recommendations welcome.)
I've struck almost all the points in the table above. A couple of things remain:
I'm not going to debate the point about the umpire; it's not what I'd include and I don't think it's necessary, but I'm not bothered one way or the other. I do, however, think it's odd that the sentence structure focuses on the umpire not on the crews.
Ok. The Rambling Man (talk) 21:05, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
I'm British and perfectly comfortable with "saw" in many contexts. But I think your use is a bit unusual (especially as you suggest they were members of "the race" rather than "the crew"). To my mind, the normal use would be "The race saw the return of several of Oxford's 2013 crew." A more direct phrasing would be better, IMO.
Adjusted.  The Rambling Man (talk) 21:05, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
I've looked again at the first paragraph of "Crews" and I think I understand it now. I'm afraid I hadn't clocked that "the Tideway" referred to part of the Championship Course. I still think this needs more context for those who aren't closely familiar with the Boat Race (which isn't me particularly, by the way: I studied at one of the universities concerned!). Just a few words, like "As part of the build-up to the race, the two universities sent trial boats to race on 19 December 2013. For the first time in the history of the competition, this took place on the Tideway on part of the Championship Course."
Adjusted.  The Rambling Man (talk) 21:05, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
The first two concerns in particular are fairly pedantic; I'm not going go to the wall over any of them, so by all means disagree if you wish. But I do think they'd improve the article, which is surely what GA is about! Relentlessly (talk) 20:37, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
Thanks for the review.  My main aim with this article, without being patronising to anyone, is to help highlight the women's side of this contest, and I really appreciate your detailed review.  I certainly don't want an easy pass at GA, let me know if there's anything else I should address.  The Rambling Man (talk) 21:05, 4 May 2015 (UTC)
No, all my concerns are dealt with. I've enjoyed working on this article and I'm happy to call it a pass. Relentlessly (talk) 21:39, 4 May 2015 (UTC)