# Talk:Shinrei Jusatsushi Tarōmaru

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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 21:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)
I love reviewing the small ones. Cognissonance (talk) 21:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)


### Lead
Note [a] needs to be confirmed by sources.
Done


### Gameplay
albeit means "though", which doesn't fit the sentence. I suggest "outside of".
Done
Link "reticle" to Reticle.
Done
hypnotize certain types enemies Grammar: "hypnotize certain types of enemies".
Done


### Reception and legacy
They found the gameplay to be deceivingly deep and intense Is "deceivingly" a quote? If so, put quotes between the word. If not, it reads very much like WP:POV.
Not a quote, but they said it was more deep and intense than it seemed to them at first glance. I replaced "deceivingly" with "surprisingly".
They found the auto lock-on function and scarcity of recovery items made it slightly difficult "found" in this sentence reads like it means "discovered". Perhaps clarify with "thought that".
Done


### External links
MobyGames is unreliable, per WP:VG/RS.
I removed it since it doesn't really add value. But for the record, external links do not need to be reliable WP:ELMAYBE.


### Overall
It has few flaws, but one of which is: why no plot section? Cognissonance (talk) 23:43, 3 July 2018 (UTC)

@Cognissonance: No plot section for two reasons. One, I don't know what it is. I don't own the game and no scans of the manual online. Two, according to MOS:VG, the "plot coverage should be proportional to the plot's importance in the game, as determined by its weight in the article's source material." In the case of this game, the sources don't go any further into the story than what's written here in the gameplay section. I'm sure there's more lore written in the game manual, but unless sources cover it, it'd be undue weight. WP:VGORDER suggests lumping plot with gameplay if it isn't too complex, which is what I did here. TarkusABtalk 18:06, 4 July 2018 (UTC)
I'm satisfied with the changes. Passed. Cognissonance (talk) 19:13, 4 July 2018 (UTC)

It's very tiny, and if this were to go for FA, it would need to be expanded. I've tried, but I can't really find anything. Harizotoh9 (talk) 06:32, 27 July 2018 (UTC)

Yep, so it goes. TarkusABtalk 11:48, 27 July 2018 (UTC)
Sega Saturn Magazine or Sega Saturn Fan would have likely done an overview and possibly an interview with the devs on this game. I just found one for Legend of Oasis. You'll just have to start digging. Also, I found a Super GamePower review of the game, and only added the review score. Their reviews are really more like overviews of the game, and half the page is filled with images with "pro-tips" and explanations which is typically more useful than the text proper. Harizotoh9 (talk) 19:54, 31 May 2019 (UTC)