# Talk:Robb Butler

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:51, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

Going to review this piece of work. MWright96 (talk) 20:51, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Lead
"He earned All-State honors in football his senior year in 1998." - make a slight adjustment to the text in bold so it reads as in football for his senior year in 1998  Done
Wikilink passes and yards to Glossary of American football for non-experts of the sport.  Done


### Early years
Pittsburgh, Pennslyvania is a redirect link  Done
Omit PNC Bank as the sponsor of the Big 33 Classic game as it is irrelevant  Done
"He garnered first team All-Pittsburgh City League" - gained  Done
Explain what a reception, touchdown and interception is meant in football terms by adding a wikilink to each of the three words  Done
"He accumulated six interceptions his junior year and six interceptions his senior season as well." - during his junior year  & in his senior season  Done
"Robb visited Pittsburgh," - please use Butler   Done


### College career
You've already wikilinked the Pittsurgh Panthers and Letterman (sports) in the previous section and you don't need another here  Done
"his sophomore year in 2000" - a slight rewording to during his sophomore year in 2000 will help  Done
Wikilink pass breakups to Pass deflects  Done
Do the same with forced fumble which must be linked to Fumble  Done
earning First Team Division I-AA All-American honors." - should be changed to earning him First Team Division I-AA All-American honors.  Done
Strong safety is a redirect link to Safety (Gridiron and American football)  Done


### Professional career
Spell out the NFL in its full name and put the acronyms in parentheses like you have done in th lead.  Done
"He was released by the Chargers on September 5 and signed to the team's practice squad on September 6, 2004" -He was released by the Chargrs on September 5 and signed to the team's practice squad the following day.  Done
Added a link to kickoffs  Done
"signed by the Brigade on March 18 and placed on recallable waivers on March 27." - this piece of text would be better of being written as signed by the Brigade on March 18 and placed on recallable waivers nine days later.  Done
The Erie RiverRats and the American Indoor Football Association are redirect links  Done


### Personal life
I will permit you to either write out MBA or wikilink the term.  Done


### References
Reference 26 is a permantely dead link. Can you find a replacement source?  Done
Be consistent in how you present the work in your citations as you use a mixture of for example Pittsburgh Post-Gazette and old.post-gazette.com in another  Done
That's all from me on this review.  On hold until all of the queries have been addressed. MWright96 (talk) 21:29, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

Think that's everything. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 03:38, 22 November 2017 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: Yes it is indeed. Can now promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 09:37, 22 November 2017 (UTC)
Thanks for the review. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 09:42, 22 November 2017 (UTC)