# Talk:Zavier Simpson

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
Reviewing this as part of a GA sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Lead
Try and start every other sentence in the lead with "Simpson" instead of "he"
Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:21, 17 April 2018 (UTC)


### Early life
"he worked out for between 1 and a half and two hours" - one
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:35, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
"On December 15 Simpson broke two-time Ohio Mr. Basketball Greg" - a comma is needed between "15" and "Simpson
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:37, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
"On February 2 Simpson posted 65 points against Fremont Ross." - same as above
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:37, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
"On September 9, 2015, 'Xavier Simpson committed to Michigan."  - Simpson committed to playing college basketball for Michigan.
Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:39, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
"Simpson earned the 2015 Ohio Associated Press Division I Player of the Year as a junior and the 2014 Ohio Division III state championship as a sophomore" - These two awards needed to be swapped so the are in chronological order
Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:42, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
Scout.com, Rivals.com and 247Sports.com need to be wikilinked
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:44, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
"were all named to the 2015–16 Associated Press Ohio high school Division I boys basketball all-state 1st team." - 2015-16 Associated Press Ohio High School Division I Boys Basketball All-State 1st Team.
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:47, 17 April 2018 (UTC)


### Sophomore season
"Simpson posted his career high 16 points in contest against top 5 rated opponents" - rewrite to Simpson posted a career-high 16 points it contest against his top 5 rated opponents.
I think you may have posted some sort of typo because it seems better to me as it is.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:56, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
Okay MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 April 2018 (UTC)
Wikilink AP Poll and Coaches Poll the first time both are mentioned
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 16:59, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
Link steal, rebound and assist too Steal (basketball), Rebound (basketball) and Assist (basketball, respectively for those unfamiliar ith basketball
Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:03, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
"Although Simpson averaged only 7.3 points per game for the season," - I believe just would be better than "only"
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:06, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
"as the game was the championship game of the 2018 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament." - reword this sentence so it reads as as they contested the championship game of the 2018 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament
I have clarified the statement, which must have been confusing.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:09, 17 April 2018 (UTC)


### References
References 25, 27, 29 & 34 are lacking the author
added.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:19, 17 April 2018 (UTC)
Going to be putting the review on hold for the time being so that the nominator can look at the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 17:28, 14 April 2018 (UTC)

Right then, going to promote to GA. MWright96 (talk) 18:30, 18 April 2018 (UTC)

Just to put it out there, I've seen his first name spelled with an X AND a Z so which is REALLY right? Mrk74 (talk) 04:24, 17 February 2025 (UTC)