# Talk:Shreen Abdul Saroor

@IngeniousPachyderm: Hey there! Thanks for all the work you've done on this article. Here's a 20-minute assessment of it, as requested for Women in Green's 8th edit-a-thon. 

The lead is incredibly short for how long this article is. It really needs more detail. (See Manual of Style on Lead sections)
It seems like all the information in the lead cited to Ahsoka United States is already verified in the body of the article. Per the Manual of Style on citations in the lead, it is not necessary to provide these citations in this case.
If you can't cite any source other than her author page on The Colombo Telegraph for her contributions to The Colombo Telegraph, then it probably isn't notable enough to be in the lead. It just reads like an advertisement otherwise.
It sometimes seems like it gets away a bit from Saroor's biography to provide historical context. The context is important, but be sure not to let it take the focus away from Saroor herself.
Citations should always be provided immediately after direct quotations, even if it duplicates a subsequent citation.
This article currently doesn't have a consistent citation style and it seems that some of the citations are incomplete (e.g. missing information on publication dates or authors). The article should ideally have a consistent citation style and all citations should have complete information, in order to safely meet Good article criteria 2.
This is quite a long quotation at the end of the third chapter in "Education and displacement". Can you summarise it?
There's quite a few citations to Chung 2004 with quite broad page ranges. More citations with more specific page ranges would be more helpful for verification.
Per the Manual of Style on lists of works, "Bibliography" is discouraged as a section header in this case; "Works" or "Publications" is preferred.
And that's my 20 minutes up. Honestly, this is a really well-written and informative article, you've done a really great job on it. My main comments have been about Manual of Style issues, so give it a read over to ensure you're in keeping with it where possible (it's GA criteria 1b!). --Grnrchst (talk) 16:04, 26 May 2025 (UTC)

Thank you so much @Grnrchst for your detailed assessment! I've made most of the improvements you've suggested now, I just have to expand the lead a bit more. I'll submit it for a GA nomination soon!
IngeniousPachyderm (talk) 19:14, 28 May 2025 (UTC)