# Talk:Massey Poyntz

This review is transcluded from Talk:Massey Poyntz/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Sahara4u (talk · contribs) 11:33, 15 November 2012 (UTC)


### Lede
Any image for the lede?
Unfortunately not at the moment. There is nothing online, and although I do have a photo of him in a book, I can't get a decent scan of it at the moment. I intend to get one eventually though! Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
“….was an English cricketer” → “was an English First-class cricketer” or simply “First-class cricketer”
Added first-class. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
Link right-handed batsman
Linked batsman to Batting (cricket). Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
“.…….against Cambridge University in 1919.” “the” before Cambridge University, since you have linked it to cricket club. There may be others…..
I disagree, that would make the sentence grammatically poor. Although it is linked to the cricket club, the way the sentence itself is phrased is perfectly acceptable. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
Could you please rephrase the last sentence of the 2nd para?
I can, but could you clarify what your problem with it is? Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
Last two sentences start with "After ...ing". It would be better if you avoid to repeat the same. Zia Khan 15:35, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
Tweaked it. How's that? Harrias talk 15:42, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
Looks good now. Zia Khan 16:23, 15 November 2012 (UTC)


### Early life and career
“…followed his older brother Hugh into the Somerset side.[6]” → could you mention his full name?
As in "Hugh Poyntz", or "Hugh Stainton Poyntz"? I don't really see the need in either case: he only had one brother named Hugh, so there is no need to include the middle name to disambiguate, and I have linked to his article anyway. It is reasonable to assume that he will have the same surname, so including that is superfluous. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)


### County captain
“……scoring 50 runs exactly in the second innings of a match against Middlesex at Bath.[16]” No need of “exactly” and put “the” before Bath.
Removed "exactly", but given that Bath is a city, it would be grammatically incorrect to put "the" before it. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
“…against Hampshire at Bath.[20]” Same as above
As above. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
A link to “bowling average”
Linked. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
“….and he scored three half-centuries.”  → “and scored three half-centuries.”
Removed "he". Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)


### Wartime career and later life
“..Poyntz was appointed to the 3rd Battalion, Bedfordshire Regiment.[29] → “third”, same for the 2nd in the next sentence
Military units are always referred to in this format: see Category:Battalions of the British Army. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
“averaging 10.00 from his three innings.” → no need of “his”
Removed "his". Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
Overall, the article looks good and informative. I'll take another look once the above concerns addressed. Zia Khan 11:33, 15 November 2012 (UTC)

Thanks for your review: I have responded to your comments, and look forward to any further points you might have. Harrias talk 13:38, 15 November 2012 (UTC)


### Final review
GA review (see Wikipedia:Good article criteria and WP:GACN)
Well written.
a (clear and concise prose which doesn't violate copyright laws, grammar and spelling are correct):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, and fiction: 

Factually accurate and verifiable.
a (well-referenced):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (Wikipedia:No original research): 

Broad in its coverage.
a (covers major aspects):  b (well-focused): 

Neutral .
Fair representation, no bias: 

Stable.
No edit wars nor disputed contents: 

Illustrated appropriately by images.
No image 

Conclusion: Good work with the article, passes GA criteria. Zia Khan 16:23, 15 November 2012 (UTC)
Pass/Fail: