# Talk:Janine Brookner

This review is transcluded from Talk:Janine Brookner/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 07:04, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
Nominator: Sammielh (talk · contribs) at 21:46, 6 January 2022 (UTC)


### GA criteria
### Comments
#### Prose
she became the first person to sue to agency for sexual discrimination and win — "and win" seems odd. How about "and won"?
I have changed it to "she became the first person to successfully sue the agency for sexual discrimination". I have also added this into the body of the article and cited it, as I realised this was missing.
a job with the Central Intelligence Agency — "a job in the Central Intelligence Agency (CIA)"
Done
she was moved to Thailand — transferred?
Done
She moved back to — at the starting of every paragraph, you'll need to specify 'she' as 'Brookner'
Done
She faced several internal problems — same as above
Done
In May 1992, she was finally — same as above
Done
by Vice President Dan Quayle — pipe 'vice president' out of the link
Done
Ambassador Glen Holden — same as above
Done
Inspector General Frederick Hitz — avoid linking two adjacent words
I have reworded this section, please let me know what you think
on Lime Key — our article calls it Lime Cay
The source I used calls it Lime Key but I have changed it to align with the article
to dispute the charges but when the CIA failed to respond, — comma after 'charges'
Done
Drug Enforcement Administration’s — fix the quote (’ to ')
I thought I'd caught these all! Fixed it
to the United States Attorney General, — I think it should be clear from the context that the nation we are talking about is US. Suggestion to remove 'United States'
I included United States to specify that it was federal rather than state, but that might also be obvious from context so I have removed it
This became her specialty. — is it a better way to phrase it?
I have tried to make it flow better with the following sentence, please let me know what you think
The "Later life" section should be re-titled to "Death"
Done
"and was responsible for recruiting diplomats from the Soviet Union to spy for the United States" —— thats like the most difficult job ever!!


#### Images
Any chance we can get Brookner's freely licenced image? This image is published in The New York Times, credited to Benjamin C. Tankersley/for The Washington Post. Would it be worth contacting the photographer, requesting him to release the image under CC-BY-SA-4.0 via Commons:Commons:Volunteer Response Team. Now, I don't think they'll do that, but its worth trying. Anyways, that is not strictly part of the GA criteria.
I agree that it's unlikely but I can give it a shot. I considered trying to add an image under fair use because I can't find a publicly available image anywhere but, as a lawyer, it makes me a bit nervous
As the subject has recently died, I am also unsure for a non-free image. Better try asking Mr. Tankersley, if you are comfortable doing so, but I won't make this point a big deal for this GAN. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 04:49, 8 January 2022 (UTC)


#### References
Inconsistency in including ISSN in The Washington Post citations
Rest good!
I have removed the ISSNs for The Washington Post
That is it, an really interesting article. Putting on hold. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 14:00, 7 January 2022 (UTC)
Thank you so much for reviewing it! Please let me know if there are any other changes you'd like me to make. I also added in an additional source that I'd thought was in there (as it's the article mentioned in the text itself where her name was first published) so you can take a look but I don't think there should be any issues with it. Sammielh (talk) 18:03, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

Everything else is fixed. The point about the image is optional, and if possible, image can be added later. Promoting! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 06:24, 8 January 2022 (UTC)