# Talk:Nischal Basnet

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 22:53, 4 January 2020 (UTC)

Starting review Kingsif (talk) 22:53, 4 January 2020 (UTC)

History looks fine enough
Passes stability
Two images, that appear to be commons
Why is the image of his wife in the Early life section? Doesn't it belong in Personal life?
Accolades table fine, but needs prose (especially to establish what the awards without links are)
Illustration needs attention
went to Australia to study 3D animation, but he ended up studying hospitality seems to be copyvio
to become a doctor or an army officer as well
Other small phrases not enough to be serious, but consider rephrasing. Copyvio check in full
Copyright needs attention
There's a wordpress blog but it contains a legitimate interview, so okay
Rotten Tomatoes is used to cite cast, which I don't think is alright. At WP:RSP, the Rotten Tomatoes entry says nothing about cast lists - I might ask about this, but give it a wary okay for the moment
Though the copyvio check pulled up some minor close phrasing from Facebook pages on him, I can't see them in the sources
I can't judge the reliability of quite a few of the sources because they are being blocked by the ad and tracking protectors built in to my browser. They may be decent sources that just have dodgy websites. I'll have to assume they're fine.
Passes verifiability, but if better sources exist, please add them
Phrases like Basnet debuted as a film director with the crime-thriller Loot, which earned 52.0 million Nepalese rupees (NPR) and became a cult classic. After his successful debut as a director, he debuted as an actor in Uma (2013) could be written more neutrally - the statements are all later sourced, but the summary style makes it sound promotional. Perhaps put "cult classic" in quotation marks, since only one article has said it.
Neutrality needs attention
Lead probably a bit too long for the length of article
In this edit I've gone through and made tweaks - some of these have been so that phrasings become correct in meaning or grammar, which would be something to watch out for
I've also removed the very long (more than a line) cast lists - the films have pages. One or two stars, once, would be fine, but not three lines.
Moved existing wikilinks to first appearance and other minor technical things
Combined sentences: there were many short ones on related topics, all cited to the same place.
Condensed two quotes by "[...]" (reduce middle parts that aren't the focus/point of the quotation)
Retitled the "2017-present" section. It's not a resurgence in 2017 if he released two films in 2015.
Re-ordered personal life to put his pastime above his relationship
The lead is like a chronology of his career, rather than a lead.
What is a "negative role"? I've never heard this term before, is it something in Nepalese cinema? If so, does it have a wikilink or a universal translation that it can be replaced with? If not, how about 'villain' or 'anti-hero', as appropriate...
The second paragraph of the Early life part is confusing on his schools. Did he go to the Oscar Kathmandu school or the Australian one first? It's not clear.
Having "NPR 5.20 crore" is unclear - why is this different to the lead figure, and what to NPR and crore mean? Wikilinks are needed, and standardising through the article should happen.
What is the last part of the Oscars quote (if it is good and competitive enough to represent Nepal as Oscars is about representing a country) supposed to say? At the moment, I can't glean any meaning.
Fails style criteria needs work
The lead says that he is playback singer. Nothing about this is ever mentioned again. - Is it true? If so, needs some coverage in the article.
There is no filmography.
Is the Himalayan Times quote about Loot 2 relevant here? It's only about the film, which has a page, not the director
Fails coverage criteria needs work
 On hold Kingsif (talk) 23:52, 4 January 2020 (UTC)
Kingsif, All done. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 08:33, 6 January 2020 (UTC)
@CAPTAIN MEDUSA: Nice - gone through and tweaked some grammar, but it looks good.  Kingsif (talk) 17:23, 6 January 2020 (UTC)