# Talk:Monica (Kinks song)

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:24, 29 July 2022 (UTC)

I will review this one today! --K. Peake 09:24, 29 July 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
The recording is dated as sometime between those separate dates, so remove it from the infobox
Done.
Mention in the first sentence that is from their sixth studio album, The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society (1968).
Done.
Move the recording info to the writing and serenade sentence, adding after the comma with "the song was recorded..."
Done.
Swap the lyrics and rhythm sentences for the correct order
Done.
"Its recording features" → "The song features"
Done.
"are partly inspired by Dylan Thomas's radio drama" → "were partly inspired by Dylan Thomas's radio drama,"
Done.


### Background and composition
Quote box looks good!
Wikilink love song
Done.
Should you write radio ban or simply ban since BBC Radio follows this part?
Changed to simply "ban".
Merge the first para with the second one per overly short size
Done.
"and he later directly referenced" → "with him later directly referencing"
I think the original is probably better, as the reword introduces a WP:PLUSING issue, no?
Remove comma after 1968 album
Done.
"by another Under Milk Wood character," → "by fellow Under Milk Wood character"
Done.
""morning to moonshine."" → ""morning to moonshine"." per MOS:QUOTE
Done.
Change the beginning of the first sentence to "Musically, "Monica" is a calypso" either using song or track, depending on what is appropriate
Done.
"serious songwriting, and compares" → "serious songwriting and compares"
Done.
"thinks its calypso rhythm" → "thinks the calypso rhythm"
Done.


### Recording and release
Remove wikilink on the Kinks
Done.
Wikilink Bass guitar
Done.
"for BBC radio on" → "for BBC Radio on"
Done.
"and kept it on" → "and kept the song on"
Done.
"he changed its planned sequence" → "he changed the planned sequence"
Done.
"was an example of" → "is an example of"
Done.
"take him seriously."" → "take him seriously"." per MOS:QUOTE
Done.
Make the last para into a sub-section, titled Legacy
A three sentence section seems like MOS:OVERSECTION to me.
"ranking of the album's songs." → "ranking of the songs."
Done.
"Rogan considers both it" → "Rogan considers both the song"
Done.
"while Kitts instead counters" → "while Kitts counters" because the counters part is obviously saying he holds a different opinion
Done.
"through its theme of" → "with the theme of"
Done.


### Notes
they date "Monica"'s recording → they date the recording
Done.


### References
Copyvio score looks fabulous at 16.7%!!!


#### Sources
Pipe Backbeat Books to UBM Technology Group
Done.


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 10:19, 29 July 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for another snappy review, Kyle Peake. Comments and responses above. Tkbrett (✉) 12:07, 29 July 2022 (UTC)
 Pass now, I understand why you did not implement two of those changes and I did some brief copy editing! --K. Peake 12:22, 29 July 2022 (UTC)