# Talk:Eugene McCarthy 1968 presidential campaign

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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 17:47, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
(starting review)

There are two dead links: ref 13 http://newspapers.umsystem.edu/default/Scripting/ArticleWin.asp?BaseHRef=CMN/1968/01/29&EntityId=Ar00903&Skin=Google&ViewMode=GIF and ref 17 http://news.google.com/newspapers?id=ICIMAAAAIBAJ&sjid=0lwDAAAAIBAJ&pg=4785,311283&dq=eugene+mccarthy+1968
Removed. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:47, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
Campaign developments
This section could be called simply "Campaign".
Section header removed completely. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:35, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
I think it is awkward starting this section with a quote. In any case, MoS says that cquote is deprecated for blockquotes.
It's a good eyecatcher, and less than 4 lines so it does not require a blockquote. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:35, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
The TOC seems unbalanced, with the first two sections very short and this third section humongous with three subsections that contain most of the article. Perhaps the material could be sectioned in a more balanced way.  Done
The section needs more subdivisions, as the reader is faced with long sections with no subheading guidance.  Done
All quotes need an immediate citation; this section has a couple in the beginning by McCarthy that are not cited: e.g. 'Upon his entrance, the Senator articulated that he believed there was a "deepening moral crisis" in America with the rejection of the political system by citizens. As president, he hoped to "alleviate...this sense of political helplessness." ' and 'Near the end of January, McCarthy campaigned in St. Louis, where he continued his anti-war rhetoric, describing the conflict in Vietnam as against "American tradition" and commented that "no nation has a right" to "destroy a nation" with the rationale of "nation building." ' Done
Prose. In quick succession in "Challenging the incumbent", second para: "where he stated", "where the he discussed", "where he criticized", "where he continued". Done
"McCarthy started off the new year by making no promises about a potential challenge of the president on the Florida primary ballot" - I assume this means 1968; best to orient the reader by reiterating the year. Done
Democratic Party nomination campaign
Also, there is not supposed to be a space between the punctuation and the reference citation. Done
Perhaps it would help by sectioning by opponent, e.g. Kennedy, Humphrey, McGovern.
Sectioned in a similar manner. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:35, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
Xtzou (Talk) 17:47, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

Rely
Looks great and I will go through it soon. But you still have the cquote (for the blockquote) which MoS says is deprecated, plus I don't think it is a good way to start the section "Challenging the incumbent". It is clunky and POINTY, not neutral or encyclopedic.  Xtzou (Talk) 21:57, 11 May 2010 (UTC)
This is a quotation from the MoS.

Block quotations
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Although your quote is not more than four lines, you have rendered it as a blockquote and not as a pull quote. Perhaps you can consider putting it in a pullquote.
I want to compliment you on the general neutral tone of the article. I think you have done a very good job. Xtzou (Talk) 22:46, 11 May 2010 (UTC)

Thanks. I removed the cquote. --William S. Saturn (talk) 00:01, 12 May 2010 (UTC)
Perhaps you want to stick it in as a pullquote.

The MoS says to use percentage rather that % in the body of an article, unless it is a scientific article.  Xtzou (Talk) 18:52, 13 May 2010 (UTC)
Might be good to add a date to the picture of the senator.
The date is not available at the source. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:32, 13 May 2010 (UTC)
However, everything looks great. Very well done!  Xtzou (Talk) 19:01, 13 May 2010 (UTC)
 GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality:  Clearly written; grammatically correct

B. MoS compliance:  Complies with basic  MoS

Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. References to sources:  Reliable sources

B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  Well referenced

C. No original research: 

Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:  Sets the context

B. Focused:  Remains focused on the subject

Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias: 

Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc: 

Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales: 

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions: 

Overall:
Pass or Fail: Pass! 

Congratulations! Xtzou (Talk) 19:02, 13 May 2010 (UTC)

Thank you. --William S. Saturn (talk) 21:30, 13 May 2010 (UTC)

Eugene McCarthy: and the rise and fall of postwar American liberalism
Almost to the Presidency: a biography of two American politicians
Clean for Gene: Eugene McCarthy's 1968 presidential campaign
--William S. Saturn (talk) 07:55, 3 August 2010 (UTC)

Links:
The Making of the President 1968
Clean for Gene: Eugene McCarthy's 1968 presidential campaign
Life Magazine:
[1]
[2]
[3]

Bernie Sanders' 2015-16 Presidential campaign makes study of McCarthy's 1968 near-miss newly relevant. The article needs reference to the way McCarthy's seeming indifference and passivity shocked many. See Richardson, Darcy G.,  "A Nation Divided: the 1968 Presidential campaign" pp 155-156. I remember the event well, and can second what Richardson says. Profhum (talk) 23:54, 8 December 2015 (UTC)

Well, the invasion of Czechoslovakia occurred in August 68 during the Democratic Convention when the campaign was basically over.

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I find "After Johnson's withdrawal, Vice President Hubert H. Humphrey entered the contest but avoided the primaries."  That doesn't seem quite like what other places said: that Humphrey entered the contest too late for the primaries. Carlm0404 (talk) 10:44, 10 March 2021 (UTC)