# Talk:Carrot and Stick

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:35, 28 April 2022 (UTC)

Comments

Just noticed, you use "episode" four times in four sentences in the opening para, which is a bit jarring.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"outside of the " literally no need for "of".
 Done though some Americans use it Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"1.16 million" non-breaking space here.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"by Chill Wills" citation?
That's sourced from the end credits so no citation needed. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
Plot -> merge six short paras into three medium paras.
This necessary? Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 14:42, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"Canadian IDs" explain, were they passports, driving licenses, what?
Canadian identification cards. No specifics. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"on the Sandpiper case" meaningless to most readers.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"led by the Cousins arrives" unclear.
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"the cold open and" what's that?
Cold open = scene before title sequence Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
Link short film.
Isn't it self-explanatory? It would also make a sea of blue. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"the Kettlemans again." The" quotes are normally directly cited.
Not if the cite is at the end of the next sentence, IIRC. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"performed a majority" the majority?
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
" double as" link?
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
Mando image is crushing the refs on my screen, perhaps add {{clear}} before the ref section?
 Done Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
"little bit." Nonetheless" ditto on direct quotes/ref.
See above. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)
That's it.  It's a good piece of work. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:05, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Done. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 01:20, 13 May 2022 (UTC)