# Talk:Muchachos bañándose en la laguna de Maracaibo

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:34, 30 March 2020 (UTC)
Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 17:34, 30 March 2020 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Lead
"it has not seen as much modern discussion as that film." - the latter


### Content
"on disc 3.[2]:66, 91-2." - the extra period is redundant
"The first is a reconstructed shot of kids jumping into the lake," - children


### Screening
"Less than six months after the first Vitascope had been brought to Venezuela, Venezuelan film" - try not to have a similarly word to follow another
"at exactly 7:00 pm[2]:9 with the screening of two films produced in the country" - a comma is missing between "p.m." and the number of the reference
"were shown at the same time." - how about simultaneously instead?
Please say briefly who Rodolfo Izaguirre is


### Production and identity of director
"For many years, sources suggested that it was either Trujillo, or Trujillo" - close repetition of the word "Trujillo"
"Those who feel he could be the director rely on Trujillo's proximity to film" - try to reword this sentence with the mention of Trujillo's surname earlier
"Alexis Fernández, film scholar and lecturer, and a biographer of Trujillo[16]" - a comma is missing after the word "Trujillo" and the reference number
Please briefly state who Jesús Ángel Semprún Parra and Luis Guillermo Hernández are


### Modern critical views
"there were typically either government-focused films or tourism films" - close repetition of the word "films"
"She proposes that being a frontrunner of the industry was cause for the government to take over the industry" - try to avoid repetition of the word "industry" in the same sentence


### References
References 3, 5, 12 and 14 are dead and will need to be archived
Reference 17 is missing the publisher of the work
This is what was found during my reading of the article. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 11:03, 31 March 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: I think I've addressed everything, let me know if there's anything else. Kingsif (talk) 16:16, 31 March 2020 (UTC)
@Kingsif: Promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 17:59, 31 March 2020 (UTC)