# Talk:Joseph Heleluhe

This review is transcluded from Talk:Joseph Heleluhe/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 02:52, 24 August 2018 (UTC)
Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 02:52, 24 August 2018 (UTC)


### Criteria
No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y


### Prose Suggestions
Please note that all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion.

Suggest expanding lead, if possible.
His father was possibly the same individual as J. H. Heleluhe, suggest:
His father may have been the same J. H. Heleluhe,
He attended the local schools in the Puna district and later studied at the Hilo Boarding School under American missionary David Belden Lyman.  does this mean he did elementary through high school, or the Hawaiian equivalent? If so I'd suggest:
He completed his secondary education at the local schools in the Puna district and later studied at the Hilo Boarding School under American missionary David Belden Lyman
In 1892. Heleluhe was nominated as a National Reform Party candidate for the House of Representatives for Oʻahu's first ward. He lost this election. suggest:
In 1892, Heleluhe was nominated as a National Reform Party candidate for the House of Representatives for Oʻahu's first ward, however he lost the election.
@KAVEBEAR: That is all my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 13:58, 5 September 2018 (UTC)

https://sites.google.com/a/hawaii.edu/ndnp-hawaii/Home/historical-feature-articles/locomobiles
KAVEBEAR (talk) 02:49, 3 September 2019 (UTC)