# Talk:Mandy Mitchell-Innes

http://www.cricinfo.com/db/PICTURES/DB/102004/055009.icon.jpg This picture could work if somebody would upload it. Bjfcool 21:59, 14 January 2007 (UTC)

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Reviewer: MPJ-DK (talk · contribs) 21:33, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

I will be picking up the review of this one - both for the Wiki Cup and the GA cup as well. I will be making my review comments over the next couple of days.
Side note, I would love some input on a Featured List candidate (Mexican National Light Heavyweight Championship) and a Featured Article candidate (CMLL World Heavyweight Championship). I am not asking for Quid pro Quo, but all help is appreciated.  MPJ-US  21:33, 1 April 2016 (UTC)


### GA Toolbox
I like to get this checked out first, I have found issues using this that has led to quick fails so it's important this passes muster.

Peer review tool
No issues Y
Copyright violations Tool
I don't see anything that's actually a problem Y
Disambiguation links
No issues Y
External links
Issues detected
Two links are dead - marked in red
Eight links are marked as "probably dead" - marked in orange
ten sources, from britishnewspaperarchive.co.uk comes back as having connection issues - marked in blue


### Well Written
Lead
Should "top-score" be "top score"?
"Oxford University, and appeared" does not need the comma
"Service, and missed" again I don't think the comma is needed.
Early life
It should be "Grandfather" not "Grand-father"
"age of 5" should be "age of five"
"each of 1932 and 1933" it may just be me but I would have put "in both 1932 and 1933"
"at Oxford, and made" no comma needed
England Test recognition
what does the term "rail-curtailed" mean?
"MCC sent team to" do you mean "MCC sent a team to"?


### Sources/verifiable
Look okay I believe they're all reliable sources and the formatting is okay. Y


### Broad in coverage
This is where it's lacking - no details on what he did for the SPS? No details on what he did during the war? Those are two very obviou gaps in the article. Is there anything at all to fill those gaps??


### Neutral
Yes


### Stable
In the short history I am not seeing any edit warring or content disputes nor anything on the talk page. Y


### Illustrated / Images
Looks to be okay, fair use for the one picture is appropriate
Info box image has no caption.
If you are considering taking this to Feature Article at some point you have to remember to add "Alt" text.
@Harrias: - that is the end of my review, I am putting the review on hold for up to seven days to allow you to make improvements. If you need more time than that please just let me know.  MPJ-US  04:13, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
@MPJ-DK: Thanks for the review. I've pretty much lost all enthusiasm for the encyclopaedia at the moment. I'd love to say that I'll get this done at the weekend, but in all likelihood I won't. I'll try my best, but if I don't get around to it, don't feel bad about closing it as a fail due to my inactivity. Harrias talk 18:45, 6 April 2016 (UTC)
@Harrias: - I wanted to give you a bit of time in case your enthusiasm picked back up again, but since the weekend is basically over now and no work I will have to fail this one.  MPJ-US  01:21, 11 April 2016 (UTC)
@MPJ-DK:No worries at all. I've still got your review to work on should I have the desire to come back and get back on with things. Take care, Harrias talk 08:59, 11 April 2016 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:18, 1 January 2017 (UTC)

I'll give this a review shortly. Wizardman 15:18, 1 January 2017 (UTC)
Here's what I found:

Perhaps a dumb question, but where did the nickname Mandy come from? If it is a modified version of Norman then disregard, though I can't say I've seen that before.
One of the obituaries described his nickname as "inexplicable", so I don't think it is commonly known. Harrias talk 11:18, 3 January 2017 (UTC)
"He achieved the landmark scored for Oxford" landmark score for, though maybe 'highest' would sound better here.
It wasn't his highest score, simply that he had scored 100 runs or more, which is considered a decent achievement. If you think it sounds odd though, I can rephrase it. Harrias talk 11:18, 3 January 2017 (UTC)
That makes sense, though I would prefer a rephrase just because that does imply something a little different. Wizardman 23:10, 8 January 2017 (UTC)
Rephrased to "He achieved two further centuries for Oxford that year..." Harrias talk 10:46, 9 January 2017 (UTC)
About halfway through, will do the other half at a later time. Wizardman 21:04, 2 January 2017 (UTC)
Here's what I found for the rest:

"they finished the season twelfth of seventeen after" should be 12th of 17 (MOSNUM allows either way, but in this instance it reads better to me)
"he played his final match in May 1949, against Hampshire." rm comma
Done both. Harrias talk 21:01, 9 January 2017 (UTC)
Not an issue with the article, but just to satiate my own curiosity, was it common to have part-time cricketers back then, or was Innes a special case, given both his day job and his ability?
Historically, a lot of cricketers were (technically) unpaid amateurs, and made their money outside of cricket (or just had family money). In Mitchell-Innes' time, this could still be a pretty big problem: the reason that Somerset had three captains in one year was because all three had other commitments: Seamer was also in the SPS, while Woodhouse ran a brewery company. Harrias talk 21:01, 9 January 2017 (UTC)
I'll put the article on hold and will pass when fixed. Wizardman 19:51, 9 January 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! Harrias talk 21:01, 9 January 2017 (UTC)
Makes sense, I've seen that pop up frequently enough in 19th century baseball so that doesn't surprise me. Anyway, everything looks good so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 23:44, 9 January 2017 (UTC)