# Talk:Catherine O'Neill, Countess of Tyrone

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Nominator: SkywalkerEccleston (talk · contribs) 09:38, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: DoctorWhoFan91 (talk · contribs) 09:07, 17 October 2024 (UTC)
I'll take this one, expect initial comments initial comments in 24-48 hours. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 09:07, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

Thanks SkywalkerEccleston (talk) 09:50, 17 October 2024 (UTC)
Going section by section.


### Lead
There shouldn't be citations in the Lead
Last sentence- paraphrase in wiki-voice


### Early life
I think the "ergo she was born ..." should be in quotes, as it seems quoted?
Lead says her family was powerful, no refs or prose here that suggests that?
Is that all about her, or can it be expanded?


### Death and legacy
Can this be expanded?


### Issue
Include as prose in the article, does not need a section
Why was the Duke of Osuna helping her?
Making some changes for grammar, and length of paragraphs, feel free to partially revert


### References
Good, all reliable


### In Rome
This was to the despair of O'Neill's dependents.: Does not feel like wikivoice


### Rest of the article
All fine, fixed the minor issues myself. Feel free to check if the edits are correct though.


### Spot-check
Checking every 8th ref in general

Ref-1: One of the most powerful families ... that of Magennis
Ref-9: "excellent education and character"
Ref-17: Seaan was born in October, 1599
Ref-25: Whatever prompted the flight, it was a snap decision.
Ref-33: Catherine complained frequently ... her young sons, John and Brian ... raised by the Louvain Franciscans ... denied by the Spanish authorities.
Ref-42: She remained in Naples and passed away .... mid-March, 1619.


### Overall
Will review the rest later, SkywalkerEccelston. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 11:55, 18 October 2024 (UTC)
Reviewed another section. And shit, apparently my ping was wrong, SkywalkerEccleston.Sorry about that. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 13:49, 22 October 2024 (UTC)

No worries, I will start updating the page SkywalkerEccleston (talk) 21:54, 22 October 2024 (UTC)
DoctorWhoFan91 Ready for your further review SkywalkerEccleston (talk) 00:22, 23 October 2024 (UTC)
Not all issues have been fixed/replied to. DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 08:17, 23 October 2024 (UTC)
SkywalkerEccleston, completed my review, no new issues arose except some minor ones which I fixed myself. But you haven't fixed/replied to whether the two sections can be expanded or not. If and when those are done, I'll do a spot-check, and pass it to GA.DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 08:17, 23 October 2024 (UTC)

Hi DoctorWhoFan91, the Early life and Death and legacy sections cannot be expanded. SkywalkerEccleston (talk) 09:05, 23 October 2024 (UTC)
SkywalkerEccleston, spot-check done, and it went well, passing the article to GA. Well done, it was very well-written! Congratulations, keep up the good work! DoctorWhoFan91 (talk) 09:32, 23 October 2024 (UTC)

Thank you! SkywalkerEccleston (talk) 10:18, 23 October 2024 (UTC)