# Talk:HMS Mansfield (1914)

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 04:40, 2 September 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a gander at this one, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 04:40, 2 September 2023 (UTC)
Sorry, it took so long to come back to this. Comments as follows:
Lead

Inconsistent presentation: M-class, M class. Depending on which way you go with the hyphen the mention of L class may need to be amended too
The form should be with a hyphen when an adjective and without when a noun as WP:NCS. I have amended the instance of the L class which was not right.
on an air raid against: suggest dropping "air" here, I think this is in reference to the seaplanes involved but nonetheless does leave the reader wondering how an attacking ship could participate in an air raid.
True. I have clarified it.
Design and development

It seems to me an explicit identification of the set of requirements being designated M-class is needed
The source gives little information, but I have added one of the most noticeable similarities, not least because it differentiated the L class from their predecessors.
with another ship ordered to Yarrow's design in May 1913,: you specify the time of ordering in this instance, bit not for the others?
The dates are a bit confusing in the sources but I have added some more to clarify.
Speed figures are inconsistent between this section and infobox.
Oops. Good spot.
Construction and career

Perhaps mention the name of the sister ship here, since there were only two ships in the Hawthorn Leslie M-class
Done.
The shipbuilder's name is recited in full here but not on first mention in the previous section
Amended.
launched on 3 December the following year: doublecheck this with infobox
Corrected the infobox.
Vindex launched an air raid against the German Zeppelin base: because launched is used in the next sentence, suggest changing this mention. Perhaps: "Vindex transported aircraft to be used in a raid against the German Zeppelin base"?
Amended.
Sources

These all look reliable and I have seen most used elsewhere for other GA/A-Class articles, so no concerns
I did spot checks on sourcing using a few of the Monograph refs; these checked out
Other stuff

Dupe links:  Hawthorn Leslie and Company, anti-submarine warfare
Image tag check out
The image caption should be explicit that the Minion is a sister ship to Manfield
Changed.
That's it for me, but I did make a few tweaks to the article text as I went through. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:06, 22 September 2023 (UTC)

Thank you. Those tweaks helped a lot. I believe I have made the remaining changes you asked for. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 17:28, 23 September 2023 (UTC)
This is looking all good, so am passing as GA as I believe that this meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 07:44, 26 September 2023 (UTC)