# Talk:Contingency Song


### Contingency Song
I've listed this article for peer review because this is the first article in which I have an interest in getting it to FA. I created this article fairly recently and have got it promoted to GA. I would appreciate any and all comments, ranging from copyediting to broadness to structuring, etc. I understand it is a fairly short article but I believe it covers all its bases from all available information on the Internet.
Thanks, Locust member (talk) 22:52, 15 March 2025 (UTC)

I thought I'd make my comments here, so the peer review page doesn't get crowded. My comments have nothing to do with content or sourcing, they're about flow, word choice, word order, stuff like that. 
I'd rewrite the first paragraph like this:

"Contingency Song" is a song by the American musician Jane Remover. It was first released as a single by DeadAir Records on November 16, 2022. The song was remastered for their second studio album, Census Designated (2023). The two versions of the song differ in length and in the way in which they were produced. Remover wrote, produced, and mixed the songs, while the mastering for the single and album version were handled by Zeroh and Hector Vega, respectively.

Second paragraph:

The song is a ballad in the shoegaze and drone genre. Without drum sounds, "Contingency Song" is built around a persistent buzz, slowed-down sounds of sirens, and howling wind. The lyrics are about a collapsing relationship, self-harm and the apocalypse. Over the course of the song, the instrumental grows in intensity until it conceals Remover's vocals and ends in near-silence. Music critics praised "Contingency Song" for its atmospheric shoegaze production.

I think it flows better, removed some repetitions, also word order.
There is also this part "The single version of "Contingency Song" differs in production from the version that appears on Census Designated. The single version is 6 minutes and 31 seconds long, while the album version is 5 seconds shorter." I would rewrite as:

The album version of "Contingency Song" differs in production from the single. The album version is 6 minutes and 26 seconds, while the single is 5 seconds longer. 

That's pretty much what stood out to me. You don't have to say "single version" when "single" is a noun. Normally when talking about music singles you write "a single" or "the single". That's why I switched it around so it flows more naturally "the album version is..., while the single is...". In this case "the single" refers to that one song, rather than one of songs released as part of a single (if I am understanding correctly).
I hope that helps, @Locust member. TurboSuperA+ (☏) 09:39, 20 March 2025 (UTC)

Yes this is super helpful, thank you so much for taking a look!! I implemented all changes. Locust member (talk) 21:39, 22 March 2025 (UTC)