# Talk:Dan Gilroy

Dan Gilroy is a police officer who beat up 15 year old Shelwanda Riley in Florida, who wrote this article?
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=10VKwULQbb8  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.112.221.71 (talk) 22:52, 12 August 2008 (UTC) 

i don't think that is the same guy...  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.145.48.230 (talk) 14:26, 1 February 2012 (UTC)

i never ever ever heard of this guy.  the only reason i know him, is from watching the above mentioned movie, he was pretty much the main character.  i would guess that he's probably just as well known for that role than for the other writing credits listed on this page.  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.145.48.230 (talk) 14:25, 1 February 2012 (UTC) 

apparently i was wrong, as someone i read knows him from somewhere else.  he was a member of the band Breakfast Club and dated Madonna for a period of time.  i read about this at http://mediapotluck.blogspot.com/2009/09/mother-goose-rock-n-rhyme-1990.html  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 24.145.48.230 (talk) 17:00, 1 February 2012 (UTC)

This is not the same Dan Gilroy who was a member of Breakfast Club and dated Madonna  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 143.85.199.242 (talk) 19:21, 26 December 2012 (UTC) 

This review is transcluded from Talk:Dan Gilroy/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 19:54, 27 November 2017 (UTC)

I'll take a look and make straightforward copyedits as I go (please revert if I accidentally change the meaning!) and jot notes below Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 19:54, 27 November 2017 (UTC)

Lead is a bit slim
What do you suggest I add? I think it's reasonably long for an article that has nearly 6k prose size
Maybe it's just because I am looking at it on a widescreen - yeah not sure either. Need ot think about this Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 15:02, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
Alright, I expanded this a tad bit by adding his frequent collaboration with his wife. Let me know what's up. Slightlymad 11:31, 2 December 2017 (UTC)
Try to minimise (if possible) the number of paragraphs that start with "Gilroy..."
Done
Dan Gilroy recalled growing up "in a house where our father was a working writer and working at home. We got to see him write, and that demystified the process of becoming a writer." - rewrite and paraphrase without quoting.
Done
The Career section is a bit listy. It would greatly benefit from any other information or fleshing out of his involvement with each or any movie. Any extra sourceable material here would be great.
I've added some blurb about his new film, though I couldn't really find coverage of his involvement on those films he had previously written as a screenwriter. Slightlymad 14:06, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
Hmm, a pity - I keep thinking there must be something out there....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 15:02, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
as the previous cut had lay much emphasis on the characters - grammar? "lain"?
I suppose that's correct, changed. Slightlymad 14:59, 1 December 2017 (UTC)
Hi Casliber, can I get a status update on the review? Did you want me to expand it further with regard to the remaining issues? Slightlymad 05:02, 5 December 2017 (UTC)
Sorry, I meanto to have a look myself to see whether there was anything out there to add. Hang on....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:13, 5 December 2017 (UTC) bleh, you're right...nothing coming up. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:21, 5 December 2017 (UTC)
NB: Earwigs is ok Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:21, 5 December 2017 (UTC)
1. Well written?:

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2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:

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3. Broad in coverage?:

Major aspects:  (in an ideal world, there'd be some more background on some earlier movies but then, are we surprised that Freejack has been well and truly forgotten about by everybody?
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4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:

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5. Reasonably stable?

No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA): 
6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales: 
Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions: 

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Pass or Fail:  - ok all good now. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:21, 5 December 2017 (UTC)