# Talk:HMS Marne (1915)

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 01:13, 11 January 2023 (UTC)
Claiming this one, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 01:13, 11 January 2023 (UTC)

Lead

I made one change for grammar, otherwise looks fine.
Thank you.
Infobox

Link Marne in the namesake field, otherwise looks fine.
Linked.
Design and development

...in peace tanks that were not used in wartime...: I haven't heard of "peace tanks" before, are these external tanks that would be exposed so vulnerable to damage?
I think that sounds reasonable, but the sources do not say. Unfortunately there seems to be no data on the difference they made either.
...twin mounts for 21 in (533 mm) torpedoes...: write out inch for consistency with other dimensions
In the literature, it is both in and inch, so I am happy either way. I have made it consistent in the body.
A single QF 2-pounder 40 mm (1.6 in) "pom-pom": the presentation of the length dimension, metric being first, is inconsistent with all the other dimensions which are imperial first.
True. The literature seems to call it a 40 mm even in the UK.
Marne was equipped with two chute,...: should chute be plural?
Yes. Amended.
Construction and career

After the battleship King Edward VII had struck a mine on 10 January 1916,...: suggest adding approximate location if it is available, it would add context as to the area of operations.
Added.
The gun flashes from the cruiser...: which one, the Castor or one or more of the opposing cruisers?
Clarified.
...a hit from a 4.1 in (100 mm)...: write out inch for consistency with other dimensions
As above.
Citations

Note 19: is an end pg range missing or should it be a single page cite?
Fixed.
Sources look reliable
Thank you.
Other stuff

No dupe links
Image tag checks out OK
That's it for me, looking in pretty good order. Zawed (talk) 09:20, 17 January 2023 (UTC)

@Zawed: Thank you for an excellent review and your kind comments. I believe all the edits are done. simongraham (talk) 03:43, 19 January 2023 (UTC)
Happy with the changes and passing as GA as I believe that this article meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 03:11, 22 January 2023 (UTC)