# Talk:Einar (Vinland Saga)

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Nominator: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 03:24, 13 April 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 17:50, 17 April 2025 (UTC)
Stay tuned.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 17:50, 17 April 2025 (UTC)

"..the mercenary Snake kills the man". Explain this better.
"his own type of sin". What does this mean?
"Einar follows Thorfinn's group to travel to Greece to obtain the money to obtain their own ship through a deal with merchant Halfdan". Rewrite this and delete one "to obtain".
"hope the anime adaptation would improve on it". You mean, "he hopes"?
"Yabuta found this level of strength in Einar upon seeing how he is able to live as a slave and befriend Thorfinn without problems". Write this better.
"In retrospect, Takeuchi chose the scene in episode 10 where Einar and Thorfinn talk about Einar's soon-to-be enslavement. He praised MAPPA's anime adaptation as he claimed it is a normal scene despite having depths of life. Yubata agreed that this scene was written to be calm and properly depict the relationship between two people and their inner lives.[23]" This whole paragraph sounds trivial.
Is Espinoff a reliabel source?
@Tintor2: That's all.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 12:11, 22 April 2025 (UTC)

Done. Thanks for the review Tintor2 (talk) 13:13, 22 April 2025 (UTC)
@Tintor2:OK. Last but not least. I got the feeling that some comments from critics in Reception are too detailed. Cut some details.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:03, 22 April 2025 (UTC)
Toned down the critics to one paragraph Tintor2 (talk) 19:19, 22 April 2025 (UTC)
OK! But isn't the "According to ScreenRant, even as slaves, Einar and Thorfinn are victims of violence ... as warrior and civlian respectively" part more fitting in the Role section?--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:27, 24 April 2025 (UTC)
It's inuniverse information but made by third party sources analyzing the series. I don't think I should move that unless it's a sidecomment from the author. Tintor2 (talk) 20:43, 24 April 2025 (UTC)
Nevermind. Added the comment to role but without saying it's Screenrant. Tintor2 (talk) 21:05, 24 April 2025 (UTC)
@TeenAngels1234: Sorry. Did I miss something?Tintor2 (talk) 00:29, 30 April 2025 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay! No, that's fine. The article is well-sourced, has a good grammar and now a better prose. Despite its brief length, I think every criteria is satisfied. Passing this.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 22:17, 30 April 2025 (UTC)