# Talk:Lew Krausse Sr.

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:10, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Well, after reviewing Jr., it only makes sense that I should take on this one as well! — GhostRiver 17:10, 29 January 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox and lede
"whom he helped win" → "with whom he won"
Very pedantic: should be a period after "Jr" in "Lew Jr."


### Early life
Switch order of sentences so that the fastball is sandwiched between his high school career & Athletics signing


### Philadelphia Athletics
Today in voices I hear: an undergraduate professor telling me never to start a sentence with "However". Here, especially, because some people read one section at a time and the part about his signing is in a different section, the construction of the first sentence jolts the reader
"in place of them" → "in their place"
Link unearned run and complete game
A little more awkward setup here: I think it can be made clearer that Mack was resting his pitchers so that they could be sharp for the Series and that this was still the regular season.
Link "doubleheaders" to Doubleheader (baseball) and home run
The idea that Sunday baseball was once prohibited in PA is wild to me; my godmother's family have Sunday season ticket packages


### Sore arm
Make sure NYPL is linked to New York–Pennsylvania League (1923–1937) and not to the 1939–2020 club


### Elmira
I understand it's because of the name change, but it's awkward that this is the one section that doesn't have the team name
Since it was Pioneers 3 out of 4 seasons, I think it's fine to call it Elmira Pioneers. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:22, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
"won a career-high 24 games, setting the Elmira team record" → "set a franchise record with a career-high 24 games won"
"6.5 games" → "6+1⁄2 games"
Link Hazleton Mountaineers (baseball) and Wilkes-Barre (minor league baseball club)
"third baseman/outfielder" → "third baseman and outfielder"


### Cardinals and Red Sox organizations
No apostrophes needed in the header


### Military and final season
"he was relying on curveballs to get hitters out" → "he was best known for his "assortment of curveballs"" (or something of that sort, I just really like the newspaper quote)


### Post-playing career
Commas around "the Phillies" instead of dashes
Link and capitalize Midwestern United States


### Personal life
Link heart attack
Normally I'd ask for a cause of death but none of his obits seemed to mention it
I know, right? Doesn't help that 90% of the "Lew Krausse" obituaries are for his son... Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:26, 29 January 2022 (UTC)


### References
Good


### General comments
Images are public domain and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig score looks great, even the mirror sites have a low % match
Putting on hold now! — GhostRiver 17:36, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Excellent work, passing now! — GhostRiver 21:46, 31 January 2022 (UTC)