# Talk:Edward Millen

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Reviewer: Coemgenus (talk) 13:12, 13 August 2011 (UTC)
Looks very good, but I have a few comments:


### Early life
You might want to link or explain "land agent".
Linked. Frickeg (talk) 12:16, 24 August 2011 (UTC)
Exactly what sort of land reform did Millen espouse?  The link doesn't help much.
Expanded - I couldn't find much on this. Frickeg (talk) 00:08, 26 August 2011 (UTC)


### State politics
Maybe some brief explanation of Australian federation would be useful to non-Australians in understanding the politics of the era.  Just a sentence or two, nothing too elaborate.
Added a little bit at the start of the "state politics" section - how's that? Frickeg (talk) 00:08, 26 August 2011 (UTC)
"...elected in the second position"  Are these multi-member districts?  Some explanation, again, would help the non-Australian.
Reworded. Frickeg (talk) 12:16, 24 August 2011 (UTC)


### Minister for Repatriation
You might want to explain the job of the Minister for Repatriation.  Was it just about demobilization, or did he deal with veterans afterward, too?
Almost exclusively veterans; the portfolio eventually became Veterans' Affairs. I've tried to clarify the wording a little. Frickeg (talk) 00:08, 26 August 2011 (UTC)
I'll get to the rest of these on the weekend. Frickeg (talk) 12:16, 24 August 2011 (UTC)

OK.  I probably won't be able to review them until then, anyway.  --Coemgenus (talk) 12:53, 24 August 2011 (UTC)


### Other issues
These changes are all good.  I'm a little concerned about how closely the "Early life" section follows the Rutledge article -- some of the sentences are very close to the source.  I understand that there's going to be some overlap in a chronological history -- things happened in that order, no matter how they're sourced -- but a little re-arranging might help.  --Coemgenus (talk) 15:54, 28 August 2011 (UTC)
Hopefully addressed. Frickeg (talk) 13:20, 2 September 2011 (UTC)
Works for me.  --Coemgenus (talk) 22:03, 3 September 2011 (UTC)