# Talk:Ivor Allchurch

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Ken Jones Ivor John Allchurch, footballer: born Swansea 16 December 1929; played for  Swansea 1947-58, Newcastle United 1958-62, Cardiff City 1962-65, Swansea 1965-68, Worcester City, 1968; MBE 1966;  died Swansea 10 July 1997.
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The same date (16.12.1929) of birth is written in the book
“The PFA Premier & Football League”

On German sites and in German books other date of birth is written completely
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13.09.1933

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 15:45, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

The next little project I'll take on. Courcelles (talk) 15:45, 5 May 2018 (UTC)
Not sure we need the exact address he was born at, but if we do, it needs to be cited. The source is ref 6 at the end of the paragraph, I've added an extra mention of it at the end of the sentence. I have removed the house number which is probably excessive but I think mentioning the street is ok.
Street is perfectly fine, of course. Courcelles (talk) 12:24, 6 May 2018 (UTC)
"Allchurch was playing local youth football at under-18 Cwm Level"  What is Cwm? Added link
"The club later lost John Charles to Leeds United several years later after a similar approach."  Relevance? - Removed
"demobbed from his military service"... very informal language choice here. - Done
"Welsh Cup winners medal"  Should that be "Welsh Cup winners' medal"? - Done
Do we need to italicize Swans at every appearance? - Done
Can we inflate the £30,000 into today's currency? - I'm not sure that's usually done, at least I don't think I've ever seen it done. I can look into this further if you wish?
Meh, it’s common when it’s the US Dollar in question, but not sure the templates exist to do it for pounds sterling. Courcelles (talk) 12:23, 6 May 2018 (UTC)
"Allchurch was one of just two players who appeared in more than 30 matches, along with Dick Keith, as the club rotated players in an attempt to find form but resigned from his position as captain after the Newcastle board again attempted to block his call up to the Welsh national side."  Two thoughts are here in one sentence, this needs to be split and rewritten. - Done
"winning just 14 league matches. "  Out of how many? - Done
"However early season form was poor as the side"  Need a comma? - Done
"was awarded an MBE" Write out the meaning on first usage. (The acronym postnomial in the lead is of course, fine.) - Done
The images are fine, the second one gave me pause, but there is freedom of panorama in the United Kingdom, so it works.
Article is stable.
Courcelles (talk) 16:58, 5 May 2018 (UTC)

@Courcelles: Thanks very much for the review, I think I've addressed all of the issues above. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 11:03, 6 May 2018 (UTC)
Promoting.  Courcelles (talk) 12:34, 6 May 2018 (UTC)