# Talk:Kiliwehi

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 15:42, 18 February 2019 (UTC)

I'll review this shortly. (I'm only semi-active anymore so it may be a few days) Wizardman 15:42, 18 February 2019 (UTC)
Didn't see anything on a first go-through; I'll do a second slower go-through later on this weekend just to be sure I didn't miss anything. Wizardman 16:09, 23 February 2019 (UTC)

The colon for the half-sibling lists feels odd. Not technically wrong to do that, so I won't push for fixing it if you believe it's fine as is.
"She and her husband became associate with King Kamehameha IV and his wife Queen Emma." associated
"This unauthorized excursion annoyed the Hawaiian government and they were asked to return home." Not sure if annoyed is the right wording here. Again not technically wrong but it feels weird to read it that way.
Very little to fix; on hold until done. Wizardman 19:12, 2 March 2019 (UTC)

@Wizardman: I made the changes as recommended. KAVEBEAR (talk) 22:29, 2 March 2019 (UTC)
Looks good, article passes. Wizardman 21:10, 10 March 2019 (UTC)

https://paperspast.natlib.govt.nz/newspapers?items_per_page=10&snippet=true&query=hoapili&start_date=20-01-1866&end_date=20-01-1874

April 6, 1866 - Hoapili left for London from Florence
April 7, 1866 - Kiliwehi left for London from Florence
April 23, 1866 - Both couples arrived in London
April 25, 1866 - Took passage aboard the ship Norwood
August 11, 1866 - Arrived in Auckland, New Zealand
June 15, 1867 - Left Auckland aboard the bark Kate scheduled for San Francisco
Boarded D. C. Murray from San Francisco to Honolulu
September 3, 1867 - Arrived in Honolulu
September 9, 1867 - Sailed back to Maui