# Talk:British industrial architecture

@Chiswick Chap: Please add a link back to industrial architecture. Thanks, Srnec (talk) 12:08, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

Done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:12, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 12:40, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Many thanks for taking this on. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:51, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments

"the industrial revolution in this" that's typically capitalised.
Done.
"offers a connection to the birth of the modern world." whimsical, not encyclopedic in tone.
Edited.
(I ADORE that lead image, I had a dreadful journey back from Reading one day and ended up on the North Circular, passing that building made it almost all worthwhile)...
Thanks!
"1932–5, " -> "1932–1935, "
Done.
"once derided, now admired" I don't think this is appropriate for encyclopedia.
Edited.
"the industrial revolution with" see above.  Apply the fix to following instances too.
replaced.
"of the Iron Bridge across " our article just calls it The Iron Bridge.
Fixed.
"Bedlam furnaces" linked in the caption but not here?  And in the caption called Bedlam Furnaces...
Done.
"World Heritage site" link WHS.  Or even the more specific List of World Heritage Sites in the United Kingdom?
Linked.
In the image captions, check for overlinking, almost everything is already linked above.
Fixed.
"1777-9" -> 1777–1779.
Done.
"Scaling up" not sure how informative this heading is.
Edited.
"corn mills, malt houses, breweries and tanneries" might consider linking some of the slightly more obscure things, like malt house/tannery?
Done.
"as war raised grain prices" which war?
The French Revolutionary Wars; soon after, the Napoleonic Wars...
"Murray's Mills," Murrays' Mills.
Fixed.
"Murray's Mills (for cotton) on the Rochdale Canal, Manc" see above for Mills, and Rochdale Canal is overlinked.
Fixed.
"storey Corn Mill" is there a reason it's capitalised?
Fixed.
"between 1795 and 1805" move that to after the mention of Telford.
Repositioned all the dates here.
More overlinking in most of the captions.
Fixed.
"time of king Henry VIII for" remove "king".
Fixed.
"Chatham Dockyard: from right to" overlinked.
Fixed.
"1785[13]" full stop before ref.
Done.
"No. 3 covered slip" do our readers know what this means?
Clarified explanation in sentence.
"in 1838.[14][11] " ref order.
Fixed.
"Dockyard, Chatham: No. 3 " Chatham overlinked.
Fixed.
"pagoda-like" link pagoda.
Linked.
"Functional design" image captions are full of overlinked terms.
Fixed.
"Early 19th century" full stop.
Added.
"for beer" no need to link common words.
Fixed.
"became the "workshop of the world".[" according to?
Disraeli.
"Eccles Shorrock's India Mill, Darwen and its 300 foot high Italianate campanile chimney, 1867[19]" full of overlinking, and convert 300 foot.
Done.
"Cathedrals of progress" again, a little POV.
The exact phrase was Gautier's "Cathedrals of the new humanity", cited, but "of progress" captures its meaning pretty closely.
"Bristol Temple Meads Station" -> "Bristol Temple Meads railway station"
Done.
Station isn't capitalised in most of these.
Fixed.
E.g. Paddington Station -> London Paddington station.
Fixed.
Check all the image captions, masses of overlinking going on.  I won't mention it again.
Fixed.
"1836–40" 1836–1840.
Fixed.
"Grade II* listed " normally hyphenated in this usage and link?
Done.
"1903–4" 1903–04.
Fixed.
"1903-4" same.
Fixed.
"1932–5 " -> "1932–1935"
Fixed.
"combination of Art Deco" overlinked.
Fixed.
"have taken up the challenge" doesn't feel encyclopedic.
Edited.
Nothing from the 21st century?
All right, added.
"Jones, Edgar" en-dash in year range.
Fixed.
A nice article, lots to do here, but optimistic. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:58, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Thanks! All done. Chiswick Chap (talk) 18:12, 7 September 2021 (UTC)