# Talk:Lights (BTS song)

Ashleyyoursmile the last sentence of the lede sounds sort of incomplete to me. Maybe you should include what Lights was awarded at the JGDA? It could be amended to read '...was awarded as one of the top 5 singles of the year at the 2020 Japan Gold Disc Awards (you left out the 's'). and moved to the end of the 2nd p'graph instead since that details how well it performed. The award would be a good cap on that. I can't add comments as part of the review so putting them here instead. Carlobunnie (talk) 01:14, 3 July 2020 (UTC)

@Carlobunnie:, I agree and was thinking of re-writing that part. I will go ahead to make that change like you suggested. Thank you. --Ashleyyoursmile! 04:42, 3 July 2020 (UTC)
One more tiny thing. In the lede, I think this sentence: "The lyrics are uplifting and find BTS calling out themselves and the listeners as each others' lights" needs rewording. Calling out someone (or oneself) means to hold them accountable for usually bad/wrong/negative actions, or criticism basically. I adjusted the initial mention in the BG+R section after your first set of improvement edits yesterday, but Idk if having it verbatim in the lede is good or not so I didn't adjust it there. Maybe it could read as 'and feature BTS singing about themselves and the listener as each other's lights' or something along that vein. -- Carlobunnie (talk) 18:13, 3 July 2020 (UTC)
Yeah it was reading weird. I adjusted it and I think its looking better this way.--Ashleyyoursmile! 19:39, 3 July 2020 (UTC)
Carlobunnie, This sentence At one point, the projector light scatters into tiny light particles, and then cuts to show Suga rapping and staring at some lights, has the word "lights" repeated three times, which is obviously reading weird. Do you think you can rephrase it, because I'm a bit unsure how it. --Ashleyyoursmile! 05:03, 4 July 2020 (UTC)
I think it reads a bit better now. Where's a thesaurus when you need it 😂 -- Carlobunnie (talk) 06:38, 4 July 2020 (UTC)
Carlobunnie, Many thanks! It does read much better now. I was literally running out of synonyms here lol. If you think that the other sections could do better with some copy-editing, please feel free to do that, I am grateful your time and help. --Ashleyyoursmile! 07:15, 4 July 2020 (UTC)