# Talk:Köllnischer Park

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Reviewer: TheSpecialUser (talk · contribs) 14:40, 20 August 2012 (UTC)
Lets see. TheSpecialUser TSU 14:40, 20 August 2012 (UTC)

Acres - please use {{Convert}}
 Already done: converts 1 hectare to 2.5 acres Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:38, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
was redesigned as a public park in 1869–73... - can this be a start of a new sentence?
 Done Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:38, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
 It is a registered Berlin landmark. - is it possible to fit this in some sentence above to get a good flow?
 Done Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:38, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
Any ref for info in th 1st para of "Location and name" ?
It reads of this excellent map, included in the article Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:38, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
What is now the site of Köllnischer Park lay in the Middle Ages just outside Cölln. - choose another word instead of "What" if possible. Just sounds odd in the start of a para
 Done Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:38, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
Caption for 1st image in "Attractions"
 Done Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:38, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
Improve caption in "Attractions" section of the other image
 Done Thine Antique Pen (talk) 16:38, 21 August 2012 (UTC)
TheSpecialUser TSU 16:24, 21 August 2012 (UTC)

This has not come up in the GAR, so I'll note that the lead is too short, it does not properly summarize the article per WP:LEAD. The lead is the most important part of an article, so this needs improvement. Regards Hekerui (talk) 09:00, 23 August 2012 (UTC)

Expanded. Thine Antique Pen (talk) 09:11, 23 August 2012 (UTC)
Good! And thanks for working on this article. Hekerui (talk) 17:43, 25 August 2012 (UTC)

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