# Talk:Dan Hamhuis

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Reviewer: Canada Hky (talk) 02:23, 13 August 2010 (UTC)

Quick fail criteria - no problems with these, so I will continue with a complete review below.
GA review (see here for criteria)
Just a few things here, overall a pretty smooth article.
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS): 
Playing Career
"Hamhuis went unselected as a bantam player in the WHL Bantam Draft.[1] Having suffered a broken leg during his junior draft-eligible season, he had limited exposure to WHL scouts"
Sounds a bit awkward, suggest "Hamuis suffered a broken leg during his junior draft eligible season, limiting his exposure to WHL scouts.  He went unselected in the (year) WHL bantam draft.
"The following season, in 1999–2000,"
Redundant, either use "the following season" or "In 1999-2000"
"He helped Prince George advance to the Conference Finals of the 2000 playoffs"
"of the 2000 playoffs" not needed
In this section, neither WHL, CHL, nor NHL are written out in full at their first mention, though they are in the lead but once in the article is usually good too.
"since Barry Beck did so in 1977."
"since Barry Beck in 1977."
In the Preds section, that WL of "season following the signing" is a bit of an easter egg.  I'd suggest it probably doesn't need to be linked at all, if its the only mention.
"Hamhuis continued his scoring pace in the following two seasons, recording 26 and 24 points"
... continued scoring at the same pace ...
"lucrative deals of up to $5 million salaries and terms of seven "
..."$5 million in salary ..."
Personal life

"His father and sisters are all hockey players, as well; Marty has played senior hockey, while Erin and Cindy have played in a women's league in Smithers"
Needs to be cut up a bit.  Suggest "His father and sisters also play hockey.  Marty played senior hockey, while Erin and Cindy played in a local women's league."
"His minor hockey team, the Smithers Storm, went to provincials in his final four seasons with the club and won the title in his last year in overtime."
...went to provincials four seasons in a row and won in overtime during his last year of minor hockey
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 
Ref 12, name of the paper should be italicized
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 
A few admitedly picky things with the writing, but not much to do to get this article to GA status.  I'll put it on hold. Canada Hky (talk) 02:23, 13 August 2010 (UTC)
Hey thanks for the review.. much appreciated.  Sorry for the late reply but I've been really busy the past couple of weeks.  Intend on getting back at this within the next few days... Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 09:44, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
I've gone ahead and applied all your suggestions and addressed all the above concerns.  Hopefully that should do it, but let me know if there's anything else further I can do.  Thanks.  Orlandkurtenbach (talk) 06:42, 18 August 2010 (UTC)
All looks good, I'll get this moved to GA.  Canada Hky (talk) 17:20, 18 August 2010 (UTC)

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