# Talk:Create (song)

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Nominator: IanTEB (talk · contribs) 16:58, 5 February 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:28, 14 April 2025 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar): 

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section): 

b. (citations to reliable sources): 

c. (OR): 

d. (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects): 

b. (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): 

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/fail: 

(Criteria marked  are unassessed)
I will review this over today and tomorrow! --K. Peake 07:28, 14 April 2025 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
To avoid a run-on, I would suggest ending the second sentence after the mention of the 2020 commercial
 Done
Start a new sentence at "Speedstar Records released it..."
 Done
"the track, and" → "the song, and"
Wikilink Super Mario
This refers to the video game that is linked before. Clarified this
Second paragraph looks good!
"directed the music video for "Create" using" → "directed an accompanying music video using" and I would suggest merging this para with the above one since three sentences each is too short
I think 'accompanying' is implied. I would prefer keeping seperate paragraphs since these discuss distinct aspects: reception and promotion.


### Background and release
"and keyboard,[3] aided by" → "and keyboards,[3] aided by"
 Done
Second and third para look good!


### Writing
Img looks good!
"who arranged and" → "who co-arranged and" per the source
Since there are two people mentioned, "co" is implied
The completion and remix pieces of information are not sourced
Shouldn't the ref at the end of the messing around sentence link to page 2?
There is information needed from both pages. I have implemented Template:rp as a solution
Songs being part of what was jammed is not sourced, nor is the name Mario session
None of the last sentence is sourced
It appears I mixed up my sources quite a bit here. There was another Real Sound interview which I confused for the one sourced. I believe all citations lead to the right places now.


### Composition and lyrics
Audio sample is too long, also remove included in sample from the end since this is implied
 Done
Digital piano is not mentioned by the source
Rhodes piano and Nord Electro are digital pianos
"Hoshino additionally provided" → "Hoshino additionally provides"
 Done
Link mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)
Upbeat is not sourced
「そのアッパーなテンション感にもなんだか久しぶりに出会う感じがする」
Remove the comma after 8-bit music
 Done
The flashing and B-dashing quote is not sourced
「8ビットサウンドがスターを取ったマリオみたいにキラキラ光りながらBダッシュする3分54秒」
The word dull is not sourced
Changed to "increasingly stagnant".「〈澱むこの世界〉の閉塞感を前にして、〈途方もない　学びを繰り返し〉ながらとにかく〈遊ぶ〉んだ、と星野はここで告げている」
Fire Flower itself is not mentioned by the source
 Removed
The full line for hanafuda is not sourced
 Fixed
The lines quoted about his subarachnoid hemorrhage do not match the source
Translation of lyrics is taken from the official website


### Reception
Img looks good!
First para looks good!
The words "hectic" and "illuminating" are not sourced, unless my translator is faulty?
Hectic is sourced (「目まぐるしく展開させていく本曲」), "illuminating" was "imaginative", which I must have misread
The vibraphone jingle is sourced as "an indescribable 'otherworldly' feeling" on my translator
This is exactly what is in the article.
I don't think writing "some critics" is suitable when it is only Tomohiro Ogawa and maybe the next one critic in this para who are sourced as saying this; re-word to mentioning Ogawa here suitably
RockinOn is also sourced here. We do not need to mention the exact works of multiple critics if one sufficies, but we can still highlight that it was a shared opinion
"It reached tenth on the" → "The song reached tenth on the"
Song appears in the following sentence so this breaks up repetition. "It" does also appear in the previous sentence, but the short-length of "it" makes it far less repetetive.


### Music video and performances
"Hoshino sings and performs" → "Hoshino sings as he performs"
 Done
"performs Satoru Iwata's pose" → "performs Iwata's pose"
Iwata is mentioned more than three paragraphs earlier, and only in passing. I would not expect readers to remember the name and "Iwata" alone is too ambiguous to look up
The tricky progression and exclamation parts do not appear to be sourced
「複雑でトリッキーな曲の展開について星野が「大丈夫ですかね？（笑）」とバンドメンバーに確認するひと幕も。」「バンドメンバーが奏でるアウトロが止むと、「できたぞ！ 素晴らしい」と笑顔を弾けさせ」(Natalie)


### Track listing
Good


### Credits and personnel
Link mix to Audio mixing (recorded music)


### Charts
Good


### Certifications
Good


### Notes
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks solid at 26.5%!!!
Good


### External links
Good


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed; sorted your review out this evening! --K. Peake 18:34, 15 April 2025 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: Thanks for the review once again. Though I have not piped links per WP:NOTBROKEN, I believe all issues have been adressed. IanTEB (talk) 00:00, 16 April 2025 (UTC)
IanTEB You should change the track to the song in the lead for consistency, also change to Iwata only on second mention per WP:SURNAME as this is not a large article. --K. Peake 07:34, 16 April 2025 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: I do not believe that the use of a synonym ("track"/"song") is a consistency error. In fact, track is in this case more appropriate since it is used in a sentence that discusses production. WP:SURNAME is to avoid repetetive use of full names, as evidenced by the example used in the policy page, and not the kind of case here (see WP:IGNORE). IanTEB (talk) 11:10, 16 April 2025 (UTC)
@IanTEB: I still disagree with you on the one surname point since this is only a few sections later in a short article, so the full name is not needed twice. --K. Peake 20:22, 18 April 2025 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: I disagree since this is not such a case that SURNAME is intended for, but I have changed shortened Iwata's name. IanTEB (talk) 22:02, 18 April 2025 (UTC)
 Pass now, I understand you at this point! --K. Peake 07:20, 19 April 2025 (UTC)