# Talk:Killian Hayes

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
Will review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Lead
"but grew up in France due to his father's professional career." - Delink France per MOS:OVERLINK
"He debuted for Cholet's senior team at age 16 before efore receiving regular playing time in the following season." - the word denoted in bold should be deleted


### Early life and career
Wikilink points, assists and steals to their respective articles on the first time they are mentioned in the article
"and often playing pick-up games in Lakeland and Orlando, Florida in the summer." - don't use seasons per MOS:SEASON
"Hayes watched highlights on YouTube," - highlights of basketball games on
Wikilink college basketball
"sharing MVP honors with Addison Patterson," - spell out MVP on its first mention in the prose and put the acronyms in parentheses


### Cholet (2017–2019)
"After his team was last-place in its league early in the season," - last place is not hyphenated
"At 2019 NBA All-Star Weekend in Charlotte, North Carolina in February, he competed at the Basketball Without Borders camp." - clarify that it was Hayes' second time at the camp


### ratiopharm Ulm (2019–present)
"six assists and eight turnovers in a win over Rasta Vechta." - Südwestrundfunk does not state that Hayes had eight turnovers in that game
"chipping in eight points, nine assists and three steals" - try not to use wording such as "chipping in"
"He recorded 20 points, 10 assists and four rebounds on 11 February in a 112–106 overtime loss to Alba Berlin." - the phrase "on 11 February" can be moved to the end of this sentence
Also, the EuroHoops citation attached to the sentence above doesn't mention that Hayes had four rebounds in this particular game


### National team career
Delink Argentina per MOS:OVERLINK
"he received a six-game suspension by the French Federation of Basketball" - reword this sentence so it passes WP:LIMITED since it is too close to the EuroHoops source that is used to verify it


### Player profile
"although he is not regarded as an extraordinary athlete." - regarded by whom exactly?


### Personal life
"Hayes is the son of Sandrine (née Demiannay) and DeRon Hayes. He has an American father, DeRon Hayes" - this text should be shortened to mention his father only once
Delink the second mention of Cholet


### References
Reference 6 should mention that the source is written in French
Reference 9 is missing the author of the article
The work of Reference 39 should be changed from Quest-France.fr to just Quest-France
Am going to place the review on hold to allow the nominator to address/respond to all of the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:02, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: All comments have been addressed. Sportzeditz (talk) 15:44, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
@Sportzeditz: Now promoting to GA class. I have made two changes to the article. MWright96 (talk) 16:11, 6 April 2020 (UTC)