# Talk:History of Fremantle Prison

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 10:05, 4 August 2015 (UTC)

Hi, I'm Calvin999, and I am reviewing this nomination. 

newly elected Labor government → You've used the American dialect way of spelling labour, but as Australia is historically, socially and politically linked to the UK, should it not be spelt using British English? (You used the British date format further down in another section)
Normally, yes, but the proper name of the organisation (which I've now linked) is spelled "Labor" - Evad37 [talk] 01:21, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
prison to lock up criminals. → 'to lock up' is too informal. i suggest 'incarcerate'
Changed - Evad37 [talk] 01:21, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
Is the entire second paragraph of the Background sub-section all attributed to the citation at the end?
The first half of the first sentence is sourced to ref 2 (Appleyard), the rest is sourced to ref 1 (Ayris). It was a long paragraph, so I've split it into two. - Evad37 [talk] 01:21, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
In the Second Royal Commission sub-section, again you've used Labor.
As per above - Evad37 [talk] 01:21, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
Outcome
This is really well written and I can't find anything else to be honest. On hold for 7 days, though I'm sure you won't need that long.  — Calvin999  16:51, 9 August 2015 (UTC)

I've replied above; thanks for reviewing! - Evad37 [talk] 01:21, 10 August 2015 (UTC)
You're welcome. Passing.  — Calvin999  09:02, 10 August 2015 (UTC)

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