# Talk:I Always Wanna Die (Sometimes)

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 12:32, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

I will take this on soon; hopefully you will have resolved the queries brought up in the other review first! --K. Peake 12:32, 23 March 2021 (UTC)

@Kyle Peake: Awesome!! Just concluded the other review, so I'm good to go. Giacobbe talk 13:32, 23 March 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
Everything in the lead needs to be written out in the body, so mention Campbell being the conductor there
Wikilink power ballad per MOS:LINK2SECT
"with a heavy electronic sound." → "with an electronic sound." for appropriate lead language
Pipe adult contemporary rock to Adult contemporary music instead since the form of rock is part of that sub-genre
"Reviewers praised the song's production, lyrics and placement" → "Reviewers praised the production, lyrics and its placement"
"drawing numerous comparisons to" → "drawing numerous comparisons between the song and"
Remove the mention of no single release, as plenty of modern non-singles reach charts
Swap the New Zealand and Ireland positions because geographical order is not needed for the lead apart from for native countries


### Background
Retitle to Background and development
Quotebox and first para look good!
"While it originally had" → "While the song originally had"
"from that era, he" → "from the two eras, Healy" to avoid confusion
Maybe you should mention in the first sentence about Campbell how he was the conductor?
"between the darkness of" → "between the darkness of both" with the pipe
"it inspired him to create" → "he was inspired to create" since there is nothing that specifically inspired him


### Music and lyrics
Wikilink strums on the audio sample text
Wikilink power ballad per MOS:LINK2SECT
Pipe Sony/ATV Music Publishing to Sony Music Publishing
I've mistakingly adding it as Sony/ATV, it is actually Hal Leonard Music Publishing. Giacobbe talk 16:06, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
Remove wikilink on violin, as it's too obvious
Wikilink strums
I cannot see ref 20's content due to it being behind a paywall, but I know [21] backs up the first statement about strums so the ref(s) should be ordered in accordance with the prose (this can be done when it doesn't disrupt numerical order of refs, i.e on their first usage)
"meant to represent someone who's" → "meaning to represent someone whose"
"details Healy's struggle with" → "details Healy's struggles with" per the source
[26] should come before [25] per the order of the prose
Even though I can't view [20], a search for the word gentle seems to render no results
Source says: "... is as such a fitting note to end on, Healy’s gently devastating vocals rising on a wave of strings and through one humdinger of a key change before falling blissfully away to let a restless dream of...". Giacobbe talk 16:10, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
That is totally fine in the manner that you paraphrase here; I can now check the OR criteria off! --K. Peake 16:19, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
"in the chorus'–which incorporate" → "in the chorus–which incorporates"
Pipe adult contemporary rock to Adult contemporary music
[23][25][19] should be put in numerical order
"drew similarities to" → "also drew similarities to"
"comparing the latter to" → "comparing the latter instrument to"
"said it is evocative" → "said the song is evocative"
"unlike the band's" → "unlike the 1975's"
"and Sigur Rós." → "and Sigur Rós' music."
"and Consequence of Sound writer" → "while Consequence of Sound writer"


### Reception
Img looks good!
"received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews"
Wikilink Neil McCormick
"called it a" → "called the former a"
"saying it "might" → "saying they "might"
"was perhaps the most" → "is perhaps the most" per the song still existing and the article being specifically about the band's lyrics
"career, and said" → "career and said"
"and deemed it a" → "and deemed the song a"
Wikilink encore
"calling it soft," → "calling the song soft,"
"its use of Britpop was unexpected." → "the song's use of Britpop feels unexpected."
"that most of the album" → "that the majority of I Like It When You Sleep, for You Are So Beautiful yet So Unaware of It"
"was non-specific" → "is non-specific"
Remove pipe on Billboard


### Credits and personnel
Shouldn't you pipe keyboards to Keyboard instrument for consistency?


### Charts
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks decent at 39.4%
Neat job with the archiving of these!
Cite The Ringer as publisher instead for ref 30


### External links
Good


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed; that was a quick review! --K. Peake 15:30, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: I think I've addressed all of your comments. If I've missed anything, please let me know. Thank you for another quick and thorough review! I appreciate it. Giacobbe talk 16:48, 23 March 2021 (UTC)
@(CA)Giacobbe:  Pass now, looks good and your response was similarly quick to the review! --K. Peake 17:25, 23 March 2021 (UTC)