# Talk:HMS Savage (G20)

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:57, 2 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

"town of Burton on Trent" Burton-on-Trent or Burton upon Trent.
Done.
Is there a link for "adopted"?
Unfortunately not.
"new 4.5 inches" should be adj=on
Done.
" the QF Mk III forward and two single QF Mk IV " these two link to the same article.
Duplicate removed.
"Operations Camera and Operation Governor" links?
Unfortunately not. I have replaced this with a bit more context.
"from Gibraltar to Scapa Flow" links?
Done.
"the Battle of North Cape" _the_ North Cape.
Done.
"purchased in the Flotilla and" not the full formal name so just "flotilla" suffices.
Done.
"615 tons of oil" avoid starting sentences with nuermals.
Reworded.
"new 4.5 inches (114 mm" see above.
Done.
"twin QF Mk III mounted forward and two single QF Mk IV mounted" likewise.
Done.
"Hazemeyer mounts" what are they?  Link?
Added link.
"Newcastle upon Tyne on " comma after Tyne.
Done.
"town of Burton on Trent" see above.
Done.
Operation Camera/Governor links?
Unfortunately not.
Link Gibraltar and Scarpa Flow.
Done.
Wartime service table could use a caption and row/col scopes per MOS:DTT for screen readers etc.
Done.
"Battle of North Cape" section and links, its "Battle of the North Cape".
Done.
"December the Admiralty signalled" overlinked.
Removed.
"cruisers HMS Belfast and" linked to a redirect.
Fixed.
"radar directed" hyphenate.
Done.
"star shells" what are they?
Added wikilink.
Link Portsmouth/Chatham, I imagine you are referring to the docks there, rather than the towns.
Yes. Added wikilinks
"Tirpitz, 1942-1944" en-dash.
Done.
"Disarmament, 1942-1947" en-dash.
Done.
That's all for me. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 10:20, 3 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thank you for a comprehensive review. I have made amendments. Please take another look.  simongraham (talk) 20:30, 3 September 2021 (UTC)