# Talk:Brendan Lemieux

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Brendan Lemieux/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Z1720 (talk · contribs) 15:48, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this article shortly. Please ping me if you have any questions or concerns. Z1720 (talk) 15:48, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 

Comments: 

Lede
"He was drafted by the Buffalo Sabres in the second round, 31st overall, of the 2014 NHL Entry Draft, and previously played in the NHL for the Winnipeg Jets and New York Rangers." A lot of commas are interrupting the flow, and I think there are two separate thoughts in this sentence. Perhaps, "In the 2014 NHL Entry Draft, he was selected by the Buffalo Sabres in the second round and 31st overall. He has previously played in the NHL for the Winnipeg Jets and New York Rangers."
Rephrased.
"Originally, he agreed to spend two years" Delete originally
Done.
"He cracked Winnipeg's NHL roster for the 2018–19 season," cracked might be considered an MOS:IDIOM. Perhaps, "He was selected for Winnipeg's NHL roster for the 2018–19 season,"
Changed.
"His development during the 2019–20 season was impeded first by a fractured hand and then by the interruptions caused by the COVID-19 pandemic." -> "His development during the 2019–20 season was impeded by a fractured hand and the interruptions caused by the COVID-19 pandemic." To tighten up the language.
Done.
"where he followed his father into becoming a pest and agitator on the lower offensive lines." Wikilink to Pest (ice hockey)
Done.
Early life
"In addition to their usual minor hockey teams, Lemieux and Mitch Marner also attended The Hill Academy, an independent Ontario-based high school for student athletes." This is the only time Mitch Marner is mentioned in the article, so I think he can be deleted.
Removed.
Junior Career
The first paragraph in this section is a little disorganized. It mentions the USHL, then being drafted into the OHL, then returns to his USHL stats before talking about the OHL again. I would put all the USHL stuff at the beginning of the paragraph, then talk about the OHL stuff.
I disagree and think that it would be more confusing to separate the two. I have added more language signposts to improve the flow, however.
"On February 11, 2015, however, Lemieux" Delete however
Removed.
"with former Barrie teammate and mentor Mark Scheifele, who had taken Lemieux under his wing when the latter was a rookie." Under his wing might be considered an idiom, perhaps, "with former Barrie teammate Mark Scheifele, who had mentored Lemieux when the latter was a rookie."
Changed.
"Although he missed a handful of games," handful might be an idiom, maybe state the precise number of games he missed.
The source does not state. I changed "a handful" to "several".
"Once again, after skating with his NHL team during their training camp," Delete once again as redundant.
Done.
Professional
"Lemieux went on to score his first NHL goal" -> "Lemieux scored his first NHL goal" to reduce the number of words.
Done.
"with his new team in only his second game," Delete only to remove opinionated commentary
Done.
"On December 27, however, he" Delete however as it is not needed in this sentence.
Done.
"On December 27, however, he suffered a fractured hand during a game against the Carolina Hurricanes, an injury with an anticipated three to four weeks of recovery time.[61] He missed a total of nine games with the injury, returning to the lineup for the Rangers' 2–1 loss to the Columbus Blue Jackets on January 20, 2020." Since we know how long Lemieux was absent from the lineup, I do not think the article needs "with an anticipated three to four weeks of recovery time" and it can be deleted. If this anticipated time is important to mention, add more commentary to the article to describe why it is important for the reader to know the anticipated time from the ice.
Removed.
"to move him even after Lemieux returned" delete even
Done.
Personal life
"Although the Lemieux family is of Canadian heritage, Brendan is an American citizen." If Lemieux is playing for the Canadian hockey team in international play, doesn't that also mean that he has Canadian citizenship, so would be a dual-citizen? This might need to be added to this section
I have previously searched aggressively for this information, which does not appear to exist. His father's American naturalization has been a much larger point of contention than Brendan's citizenship.
I'll continue comments later, including images and references. Z1720 (talk) 17:05, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

References
Version checked Refs checked: 45, 54, 67, 74, 79, 80, 83, 

Earwig doesn't return any copyright concerns.
Per WP:NYPOST, the New York Post is not considered reliable. However, I think the reason for its unreliability concerns political articles, so I am willing to keep them in this article. However, if you can replace the source with a more reliable one, I encourage editors to do so.
The Post's sports reporting is some of the best in the country. Of the four NYP sources used, two use direct quotes from Lemieux or his father, and the other two contain uncontroversial information that has proven difficult to find elsewhere.
"what Quinn deemed to be a "bad" tripping penalty" -> what Quinn deemed to be a "bad [tripping] penalty"
Done.
"Quinn took Lemieux out of the lineup in order to "get a look at" Colin Blackwell." -> in order to "get a look at [Colin] Blackwell"
Done.
Images
No concerns
Those are my initial comments. Template at the top has been updated. I'll place on hold until concerns are resolved. Z1720 (talk) 17:21, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Z1720 All comments addressed. — GhostRiver 17:58, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
Concerns have been resolved, and I will promote this article. Congradulations. Z1720 (talk) 19:05, 29 January 2022 (UTC)