# Talk:Jimmy Frise

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:12, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
Will review. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 06:12, 24 June 2016 (UTC)

General
No copyvio/dablink/duplink/external link troubles.
Prose looks flawless to me, excellent job!
Merci! Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble!
Lead
The Canadian cartoonist James Llewellyn "Jimmy" Frise I think articles usually open like "James Llewellyn "Jimmy" Frise is a Canadian cartoonist best known for..."
Yes, but it's no rule. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
Life and career
to 12 pages by 1931 Any earlier figure we can compare this with?
Hmmm ... I've dropped this.  Apparently the whole Star Weekly section started off as 16 pages, and eventually the comics section in it grew to 20 pages. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
whit débuted "which debuted"?
Fixed. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
and 12 December 1925 "on"
Fixed. Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:55, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
Frise chatted with the frequent visitors...press without Mr. Frise." Seems to belong more to Personal life.
Really?  But this is all at work ... ? Curly Turkey 🍁 ¡gobble! 22:56, 27 June 2016 (UTC)
Not a big deal, optional. To me it seems this reflects more on his personality. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:16, 28 June 2016 (UTC)
Thanks for the changes. I'm sure this can be promoted now. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 08:16, 28 June 2016 (UTC)