# Talk:Lucas Ocampos

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)

Hi, I will be reviewing this against the GA criteria as part of a GAN sweep. I'll leave some comments soon. JAGUAR  17:38, 25 November 2016 (UTC)
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### Checking against the GA criteria
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
The lead requires an expansion for it to summarise the article. For an article this size I would say that it needs at least a paragraph and not just one sentence, per WP:LEAD
"Having started only 7 matches by the end of January 2015" - seven (I think in this case it needs to be written out)
"where he paired up with compatiot Marcelo Bielsa" - I don't know what this means
Ref 24 is missing an access date
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 
No original research found.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 

The only thing holding this back is the length of the lead. It needs to be expanded to at least a paragraph (a few more sentences should do it) for it to meet WP:LEADLENGTH. Other than that, it is well written and comprehensive so it should easily pass afterwards.  JAGUAR  13:04, 27 November 2016 (UTC)


### Edits
Hi Jaguar (talk, thanks for reviewing the article. I have made the following corrections as per your above recommendations.

The lead has been extended and gives a broad overview of his career so far with key points.
'7' has been changed to 'seven'
I have added an access date to ref 24
'compatiot' is meant to read 'compatriot' - Bielsa and Ocampos are from the same nation. I have corrected the spelling thereof.
Cheers, Liam E. Bekker (talk) 16:04, 27 November 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for the responses! I've checked through the article again and I'm happy that it meets the criteria now. I thought it might of meant 'compatriot'...  JAGUAR  21:22, 27 November 2016 (UTC)