# Talk:IG-11

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:00, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

" bounty hunter droid" sea of blue.  I thought it would link to an article about bounty hunter droids.
I wasn't sure how to resolve this without eliminating one of the wikilinks, so I removed the link to "bounty hunter" and kept the one for "droid". — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
" an alien known" alien links to "extraterrestrial" but aren't pretty much all characters in Star Wars therefore alien?
Removed the wikilink. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"the Child" - the should be inside the pipe.
Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
likewise for the Mandalorian.
Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
" IG-11 is later repaired" was he really "killed"?  He's a droid....
Changed to "destroyed". — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"nurse" doesn't need linking.
Removed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"mutual work together" probably could drop either mutual or together, it's somewhat tautological to have both.
Dropped "together". — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
" by reviewers and fans alike. He has been described as a fan favorite" maybe merge, " by reviewers and has been described as a fan favorite"...
Good call, I combined them. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"appeared ... appearance" is clunky.
I changed "appeared" simply to "was", though if you have a suggestion for a better word I'm open to it. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"outlawed in the galaxy." throughout the galaxy (and which galaxy?)
Well, the answer is the galaxy that Star Wars is set in, which doesn't have an actual name, which is why I just went with "the galaxy". LOL But to avoid confusion, I just removed "in the galaxy" from this sentence. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"In his first appearance on the show, IG-11" I don't think "on the show" is required.
Agreed, I removed it. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
" known as The Mandalorian" the Mandalorian.
Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
That sentence has three "bounty"s
Reworded the second one; I think the other two are unavoidable because one identifies the Guild by its proper name, and the other identifies the profession of the Mandalorian. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"the asset to " first use of "asset", it's not clear this means the "unidentified living being" noted earlier.
Changed from "asset" to "being". — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"a massive gunfight" I think "massive" is not encyclopedic in tone, perhaps "large".
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
as "The Child" -> as the Child.
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"and kills him " again, wasn't he more "destroyed" than killed?
Changed this one as well. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"protect",[9] When the" grammar fail.
Changed the comma to a period. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
Imperial Scout Troopers and "stormtroopers" (not capitalised) both link to the same article.
Removed the second wikilink. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"a Mandalorian armorer in " as this links to a specific character, probably best to put "a Mandalorian" inside the pipe.
Done. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"the Terminator," put "the" inside the pipe.
Done. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
"among fans due to their familiarity with" tighten this to  "among fans familiar  with"
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
Taika Waititi is overlinked.
Removed the wikilink under "Portrayal" so he's now only linked in the first reference in the body of the article. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
Put (MCU) after the first expanded version of it.
Instead of doing this, I just changed "MCU" to "Marvel" so we wouldn't need to establish the acronym, if this works for you? — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
Link MVP, this isn't a common term outside the US.
Done. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
Ref 31, spaced hyphen should be en-dash.
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
That's all I have.  FWIW I thoroughly enjoyed the article, the above are suggestions which would probably propel it way beyond  GA quality.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 11:55, 13 April 2020 (UTC)

Thanks The Rambling Man, and thanks for the review! — Hunter Kahn 13:56, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
This is excellent stuff.  No hesitation in promoting.  I'll probably take a look at another similar GAN of yours in due course.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:20, 13 April 2020 (UTC)
Thanks very much for the review The Rambling Man! — Hunter Kahn 19:00, 13 April 2020 (UTC)