# Talk:Johnny Thunder (song)

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:58, 18 August 2022 (UTC)

I will review this later today! --K. Peake 07:58, 18 August 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Should Pye studios really be piped to when Pye Records in linked in the infobox anyway?
I think so since Pye Studios may end up with its own article one day, rather than being a redirect to Pye Records.
Move the inspiration sentence to being the one before the musical description
Done.
The term "simple" is not notable for the lead
Done.
"The song is one of" → ""Johnny Thunder" is one of"
Done. I also moved this sentence so it opened the paragraph, which seemed a bit more natural.
"Davies expressed desires publicly" → "Ray expressed desires publicly" per MOS:SAMESURNAME
Done.
Should Anthony Gezale's stage name really be italicised?
I believe so by MOS:WORDSASWORDS.


### Background and composition
Quote box and first para look good!
Should Johnny Thunder be surrounded by speech marks or is this about the name, not the song title?
I clarified it as The Johnny Thunder character ...
Remove comma before "David Watts"
Done.
"lead character, Johnny, as" → "lead character Johnny, as"
Done.
Why is Johnny Thunder italicised?
MOS:WORDSASWORDS
Are you sure straightforward is an appropriate term, rather than something like traditional?
Andy Miller used the word "straightforward" to describe the song's simple production and Jon Savage describes it as one of the album's "great rock songs". I'm worried the way I had it written was a bit too close to WP:SYNTH, since the authors were saying different things, so I've rewritten it. I've left Savage to source it as being a rock song, while I've moved Miller's mention of it being a straightforward production to the recording section.
Pipe rock to Rock music
Done.
Remove the Kinks' 1968 album introduction since this being in the lead is sufficient
Done.


### Recording and release
Img and first para look good!
"when he expanded its track listing" → "when he expanded the track listing"
Done.
Remove comma before "and personally phoned", also moving [22] solely to the end of the sentence
Done.
"likened its fast strumming to" → "likened the fast strumming to"
Done.
The eventual guitarist role is not sourced and why is Johnny Thunders italicised?
Removed guitarist mention. Italicised because of MOS:WORDSASWORDS.


### Notes
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks fab at 18.0%!!!!


#### Bibliography
Good


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed; smooth article here! --K. Peake 20:24, 18 August 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for another review Kyle Peake. I’m away for the weekend, so I’ll get to this one during the week. Tkbrett (✉) 12:27, 19 August 2022 (UTC)
Thanks for your patience Kyle Peake, responses are above. Tkbrett (✉) 15:09, 22 August 2022 (UTC)
 Pass now, quality job and I understand your reasoning for not implementing certain changes! --K. Peake 07:13, 23 August 2022 (UTC)