# Talk:Brock Bowers

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Reviewer: JTtheOG (talk · contribs) 03:53, 1 July 2023 (UTC)

 
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Hello! I'll be conducting this Good Article review! JTtheOG (talk) 03:53, 1 July 2023 (UTC)
It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar): 

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section): 

b. (citations to reliable sources): 

c. (OR): 

d. (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects): 

b. (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): 

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/fail: 

(Criteria marked  are unassessed)


### Lead
MOS:LEADLENGTH says the lead for articles with 15,000–30,000 characters should be two to three paragraphs, so the lead should be lengthened to at least two full paragraphs. You can give a broad overview of the article and then go into detail, mentioning his high school career and more about college. You could also mention he was a four-star recruit.
Added to the lead, although it is still only one paragraph.


### Early life and high school career
Reference 1 does not mention his date of birth.
Done
Reference 3 does not mention Warren was All-Big West.
It comes from his UGA bio which is an external link at the bottom. I can add the bio as an inline citation or leave it as is depending on your preference.
"After graduating his mother became a high school math teacher" → "After graduating, his mother became a high school math teacher"
Done
Add wikilinks to the first mentions of basketball, baseball and soccer, as well as to the first mentions of each of the football positions.
Done
"receiving a flurry of offers" → "about a dozen offers"
Done
"Bowers accounted for 1,499 all-purpose yards, set a school record with 14 touchdown receptions" → "Bowers accounted for 1,499 all-purpose yards and set a school record with 14 touchdown receptions"
Done
"0-10" → "0–10"
Done
Link COVID-19 pandemic
Done
"he would stay in shape by running up and down the hills of Napa" → "he stayed in shape by running up and down the Napa hills"
Done


### Recruiting
"sought after" → "sought-after"
Done
"4 star recruit and the 3rd ranked" → "four-star recruit and the third-ranked"
Done
Remove the subsequent wikilink of recruit
Done
Should mention that his recruiting ranking is according to 247Sports.
Done
"Despite being from the west coast, Bowers wanted to play college football in the south, due to the regions passion for football" → "Despite being from the West coast, Bowers wanted to play college football in the South due to the region's passion for the sport"
Done
"with the teams tight ends coach" → "with the team's tight ends coach"
Done


### College career
#### 2021
I suggest breaking up the second sentence in half because it's running on.
Done
Use – instead of - for all the game scores.
Done
"In his first career game, Bowers led the Bulldogs in receiving with six receptions" → "In his first career game, Bowers led the Bulldogs in receiving with six catches"
Done
"career long" → "career-long"
Done
Wikilink Blowout (sports)
Done
"On October 16, he had another 100 yard performance" → "On October 16, he had another 100-yard performance"
Done
Reference 19 says he had six catches in the game while article says five.
ESPN and CBS gamelogs both have it as 5, replaced the source.
"Bowers would have additional multi touchdown performances" → "Bowers had additional multi-touchdown performances"
Can you find better sources for Reference 20? Though this isn't necessary.
Done
It might be important to note he set an SEC championship game record against Alabama.
Done
Avoid using # per MOS:HASH
Done
"Bowers would have 5 receptions for 55 yards and a touchdown" → "Bowers made five receptions for 55 yards and a touchdown"
Done
Can you find a source for his performance in the national championship game that combines the info from References 23 and 24? Again, not completely necessary.
"with just over 3 minutes left in the game to extend the Bulldogs lead to 8 points" → "with just over three minutes remaining which extend the Bulldogs' lead to eight points"
Done


#### 2022
You should mention he was a Walter Camp preseason All-American.
I can change (and source) the sentence to mention that nearly every major media outlet (ESPN, AP, PFF, CBS) had him as preseason All-Amercian as it would be odd just to mention Walter Camp.
Can you perhaps find better sources for Reference 32? Not necessary. Plus, I understand sometimes there's just not a good source.
Done
Reference 35 does not mention total rushing yards.
Added source
"career high" → "career-high"
Done
"off of a deflection, that some media outlets dubbed" → "off of a deflection which some media outlets dubbed"
Done
"Georgia would defeat Ohio State 42–41 to advance to the national championship." - Source this sentence
Done
Add comma after "At the conclusion of his sophomore season"
Done
"won the John Mackey Award for the nations best tight end" → "won the John Mackey Award for the nation's best tight end"
Done


### References
Add wikilinks to publications such as The Wall Street Journal instead of WSJ on Reference 14 or The Atlanta Journal-Constitution instead of ajc on Reference 21. Other examples include wikilinks for San Francisco Chronicle, Napa Valley Register, Yahoo! Sports, and Bleacher Report.
Fix capitalization in author's name on Reference 16.
Done
Write out the complete dates for dates and access-dates for consistent formatting. For example, April 17, 2023 instead of 2023-04-17 on Reference 1.
Done
I can't seem to access Reference 10, but if you can then I'll AGF.
Link must have died, replaced with different source.


### General comments
Is there anything that can be added for a personal life section? I saw in one of the sources that his sister plays or played college softball at Sacramento State.
He has some notable brand deals (Dick's, Zaxby's, NoBull) that I could mention as well as a girlfriend but I doubt it would be a very good section as most of his family info is in the early life section already.
No stability concerns in the revision history
Copyvio score looks good
Am placing the review on hold to allow the nominator to address the points raised above JTtheOG (talk) 22:21, 1 July 2023 (UTC)

@JTtheOG I believe that I have addressed everything.  Newtothisedit (talk) 02:33, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
Good work here. I know being asked to make a bunch of edits is never easy. I fixed two of the dates that were still in the numbers-only formatting. Could you make a quick mention of his sister playing at Sac State? After that, it should be ready to go. JTtheOG (talk) 02:58, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
@JTtheOG Fixed Newtothisedit (talk) 10:04, 2 July 2023 (UTC)
Done. Listing the article now. Congrats! JTtheOG (talk) 18:37, 2 July 2023 (UTC)