# Talk:Dutch expedition to Valdivia

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Dutch expedition to Valdivia/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 00:29, 29 July 2018 (UTC)
I will take this one. Comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 00:29, 29 July 2018 (UTC)
An interesting article. I've done a little bit of copyediting, please review my changes to check you are OK with them. 

Your changes were all improvements.
Comments as follows:
Lead

Dupe link: Dutch Republic; Spanish Empire
Done.
Background

Dupe link: Huilliche
Done.
Expedition

link Hendrik Brouwer on first mention
Done.
Dupe linl: Valdivia
Done.
"Except for Brouwer and other leaders, the true objectives were not known to the participants of the expedition." This is a little unclear; are the objectives recited not the true objectives? What did the participants believe was the expedition's purpose?
Added a bit to try and clarify. Does that help? If not I will rewrite it to make clearer.
Chiloé

Dupe link: Chiloé Archipelago
Done.
"According to Diego de Rosales...": we need context for who he is; a historian presumably?
Yes. Apologies. Added.
Valdivia

Manquipillan is not redlinked but Manqueante is?
Done.
Spanish response

Dupe link: Arauco War (on Mapuche resistance)
Done.
Other stuff

References: note 10, Robert Kock ref needs formatting using the website template I think, to match note 11. Chile is spelt incorrectly
Done. I think. Wiki-referencing is not a strong point.
Bibliography: the Lane ref needs dashes in its ISBN.
Done. (Possibly.)
The Montt Pinto ref needs a place of publication and a OCLC number
Done
Captions for images shouldn't finish with fullstops
Umm. That's not my reading of MOS:CAPFRAGS. "Most captions are not complete sentences, but merely sentence fragments, which should not end with a period. If any complete sentence occurs in a caption, then all sentences, and any sentence fragments, in that caption should end with a period."
Images themselves have appropriate tags
No dablinks
External links check out OK
That's my review completed. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:59, 23 August 2018 (UTC)

@Zawed: That was embarrassing. Thank you for soldiering through it. Hopefully it is a little better now. Gog the Mild (talk) 11:03, 23 August 2018 (UTC)
Have reviewed your changes and comment and this is looking good. I think this is well written and illustrated, covers the subject to an appropriate depth and referenced with reliable sources. Passing as GA now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:31, 24 August 2018 (UTC)