# Talk:Glen Rice Jr.

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 18:21, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:21, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
Here are my concerns:

Gainesville Times links to a dab page. Have it link to the Georgia one.
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  21:55, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"Rice was the leading returning scorer for the Yellow Jackets as a junior.[1]" The first couple times I read this I thought it meant he was the leading scorer while a junior, but that's what he is now. I'm not sure how to reword it to fix that clarification, since he led the team as a sophomore but is a junior now; maybe reword to '...for the Yellow Jackets after his sophomore season.'
I thought leading returning scorer was a commonly understood sports phrase, but I will try to refine this.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  23:27, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
As should be the case with anything in the WP:LEAD, further detail is available in the main body.  I think it is O.K. as it is. I have used the phrase in prior GA LEADs.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  23:35, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"according to the Marietta Daily Journal" comma after journal
Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  21:55, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"As a senior he was an Class" comma after senior, a Class
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  21:58, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"that was ranked 21st in the nation and that included" rm second that.
I think it is grammatically correct either way, but I made the switch.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:01, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"He started his freshman season on the bench.[15] He played in all but one game for Georgia Tech as a freshman" I'd start the paragraph with Rice, and I'd combine these two sentences.
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:14, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"His had season highs for" He had
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:15, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"ranked 2nd on the team in terms of minutes," second
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:21, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"and then 28 points" rm then
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:25, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"with 11 points and 11 rebounds, but also, he had his first career 4-blocked shot effort " I'd rm comma after also and change to "but also had his first.."
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:46, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
"of the season on December 19," rm comma
Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:29, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
I'm surprised now many issues I found given the length of the article. I'll put it on hold, then I plan to do a second read-through to make sure everything sounds ok, after which I'll ideally pass it. After you do the issues, do another read-through of the article to make sure everything sounds ok to you. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 21:07, 28 December 2011 (UTC)
I read through the article again and everything seems ok alongside the changes you made. As a result, I will pass the article as a GA. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:17, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

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