# Talk:Danan: The Jungle Fighter

This review is transcluded from Talk:Danan: The Jungle Fighter/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Nominator: CooperCool23 (talk · contribs) 18:06, 25 May 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 15:40, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

Will review this, though I am concerned about the lead's length and lack of comprehensiveness. Jaguar (talk) 15:40, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

Lead
"for the Master System exclusively in PAL regions." - according to the infobox, it was released only in Europe. Unless proven otherwise, it will be better to reflect that. Odd, considering it was developed by Sega
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The lead is too short and does not summarise the article effectively. At the very least, there needs to be a mention on its release - is there nothing on development or sales?
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Yeah, as far as I could tell there are no development stories to speak of.  There might be a sales report somewhere out in the grapevine, but I wouldn’t  know the first place to look for that. COOPER COOL 23 user page 19:26, 21 June 2025 (UTC)
Body
"such as time increasing clocks, knifes which are required for progression" - knives
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"Danan to summon one of three animals to his aid" - what are the animals in question?
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I am wary of every section of the article beginning with "Danan: The Jungle Fighter". Replacing it with variants such as "the game" or "it" will improve prose flow
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"Gilbas will never truly be defeated as long as people have greed cloud their judgement" - I feel 'greed' is an unnecessary overlink
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The reception section needs to be fleshed out and expanded. Four publications is fine - the minimum I would say - however, the section is still on the short side
Also, the reviewer names are missing from the reception. Eg. John Smith from Computer and Video Games commended the graphics...
"derided the game as dull and samey" - unencyclopaedic
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The references are not formatted correctly, with almost all missing proper magazine and publication fields. Compare with other VG articles if you are unsure on how to format
The notes section is empty and should be deleted.
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At the moment the article does not meet the GA criteria, but I am willing to leave it on hold until improvements are made, seeing the work you have put in it since March. I do not with failure to deter you, so I strongly recommend you compare this with other Master System GAs and base your improvements on that. While it is not strictly necessary to have a development section if no information exists, I strongly encourage you to find if there is anything you can implement.  Jaguar (talk) 16:05, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

Did a majority of the points you brought up. As for why I haven’t done the points related to the reception section that isn’t entirely my fault. Not only do I currently not have active access to a computer, but my phone has about a hundred thousand different website restrictions on it, thus meaning I can’t go back and check/add something (that probably tells you more about my age than anything else but eh still worth pointing out). So in other words, from my perspective at least, in order to add the stuff you’re asking for, another editor would need to be informed about this and have the time and energy to add those things to the article (if that’s even possible to do). I really am sorry for that inconvenience, if I would I could 100% knock it out within a week or two, but as my situation stands I can’t really do much. COOPER COOL 23 user page 19:26, 21 June 2025 (UTC)
That's fine, thank you for addressing most of the points above. I don't believe you can find anything on this game's development, given its obscurity. With that being said we can forego that part, as the article's current condition satisfies the comprehensiveness part of the criteria. If you can just expand the lead's second paragraph, it should be nearly good to go. Don't fret, I was 12 when I made my account! Jaguar (talk) 23:27, 21 June 2025 (UTC)
Okay, I tried expanding the second paragraph of the lead. It’s fine now right? COOPER COOL 23 user page 00:23, 22 June 2025 (UTC)
Alright, considering the subject's obscurity and scarcity of information, I believe this scratches the GA criteria. Will get the promoted now. Well done!  Jaguar (talk) 20:56, 22 June 2025 (UTC)