# Talk:Cyclone Fay

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 21:09, 19 November 2011 (UTC)
Seing that I've ever looked at the article much, I though I would review.


### Lead
"Cyclone Fay was a tropical cyclone which struck Western Australia during the 2003-04 Australian region cyclone season." boring. Any better opener? YE  Pacific Hurricane
When did Fay form? YE  Pacific Hurricane
What direction did it move in? YE  Pacific Hurricane
When did Fay intensify? YE  Pacific Hurricane
"Fay was the only Category 5 cyclone during the season. It had a minimum pressure of 910 mbar (hPa; 26.87 inHg) and maximum wind gusts of 132 mph (213 km/h).[1] " why are you using gusts instead of sustained winds? YE  Pacific Hurricane
 Fixed all -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 02:42, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
There is some over linking in the section. YE  Pacific Hurricane 03:45, 8 December 2011 (UTC)


### Meteorological history
"system was designated Tropical Cyclone 18S by the Joint Typhoon Warning Center, with winds of 25 knots (29 mph; 46 km/h)" why are you breaking WPTC rules and using knots? YE  Pacific Hurricane
"Fay began to turn southward on 17 March;" delink compass road directions. YE  Pacific Hurricane
"By March 19 Fay's track had turned to the west-southwest," see above. YE  Pacific Hurricane
"and on 21 March, Fay became a Category 5 storm,[6]" on what scale?. YE  Pacific Hurricane
"strengthening as it moved into a shortwave trough" jagron please. YE  Pacific Hurricane
" intensifying its poleward outflow." explain/wikilink poleward outflow. YE  Pacific Hurricane
" intensifying its poleward outflow." sounds like a word is missing. YE  Pacific Hurricane
" A mid-latitude trough caused the steering ridge to weaken, causing Fay to turn to the south.[7]" again, jagron is needed in two places
"It then encountered moister air as it moved southward, leading it to reintensify from 25-27 March, becoming a Category 4 storm as it made landfall on the Pilbara coast between 8:00 a.m. and 9:00 a.m. on 27 March, with estimated wind gusts of 146 mph (235 km/h). " a puch of things, 1 UTC time per WPTC standards. 2) reintensify to re-intensify. 3. wind speeds not gusts per WPTC standard. YE  Pacific Hurricane 21:09, 19 November 2011 (UTC)
 Fixed all -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 03:02, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Added the UTC time of landfall. Inks.LWC (talk) 03:44, 8 December 2011 (UTC)


### Preparations
Due to it's lack of size, combine it with the impact section if you like. YE  Pacific Hurricane
"Cyclone warnings were issued for areas threatened by the storm, and communities in the path of the storm were warned of expected high rainfall, as amounts greater than 20 centimetres (7.9 in) were expected.[10]" two things, Firs tof all, abbrvate centimeter Second of all, wikilink to tropical cyclone watches and warnings during the first two words of the sentence. YE  Pacific Hurricane
 Fixed all -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 02:45, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Fixed so that centimeters is now abbreviated. Inks.LWC (talk) 04:01, 8 December 2011 (UTC)


### Impact
Combine the first three paragraphs. YE  Pacific Hurricane
Any rainfall records? YE  Pacific Hurricane
Any damage total? YE  Pacific Hurricane
 Fixed all: No damage/rainfall records found. -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 03:02, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
Further fixed.  The rainfall amount for one of the sites was off by a factor of 10.  Here's a question...the rainfall amounts in that report were significantly higher than the TRMM rainfall estimates.  Should we maintain the graphic when the discrepancy is this large?  Keep in mind that all rain gages actually under report rainfall, not over report, especially during high winds.  Thegreatdr (talk) 22:58, 13 December 2011 (UTC)


### Aftermath
Combine with impact. YE  Pacific Hurricane
Why was it retired. YE  Pacific Hurricane
 Fixed all -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 02:42, 4 December 2011 (UTC)


### Summary
Article got better as I went along, will leave on hold for at least a week or two. YE  Pacific Hurricane

I'm currently finishing up a research project on a storm case study that I'll be turning in the week after Thanksgiving, so if you're willing to give me teh two weeks of it on hold, I'll get to it hopefully either late this week or early next week. Inks.LWC (talk) 06:02, 22 November 2011 (UTC)
Ill give you two to three weeks, hows that? YE  Pacific Hurricane 14:17, 22 November 2011 (UTC)
I haven't forgotten about this.  I do plan on getting to it by Monday/Tuesday. Inks.LWC (talk) 06:47, 2 December 2011 (UTC)
I have gone ahead and fixed all of YE's concerns. -- TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 03:02, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
I went through and cleaned up the date formatting for the dates you added to make them consistent.  YE, if there's anything else you suggest changing, I'm back from working on my research and can address the issues. Inks.LWC (talk) 03:46, 8 December 2011 (UTC)
Anything new here? What's holding it back from passing? – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 00:37, 17 December 2011 (UTC)
Overlinking in lead, more MH, and combine the last two sentences of the impact. YE  Pacific Hurricane 17:08, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
I fixed the overlinking and impact, but not sure what you mean by "more mh". Wizardman Operation Big Bear 04:56, 25 December 2011 (UTC)
The Meteorological history section needs to be expanded. YE  Pacific Hurricane 05:15, 25 December 2011 (UTC)
Ah, ok. Out of my expertise, so hopefully the two above can do that swiftly. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 06:10, 25 December 2011 (UTC)
Well, I'm not sure I can do much more to expand that.  The sources I put in are all that I can find.  If anybody else wants to add to it, go ahead.  But why wasn't expansion listed in the original things to fix? Inks.LWC (talk) 04:48, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 There are 24 advisories + a TCFA from the JTWC, that you could use to expand this article like i told you back in October. Also if you massaged the BoM report a bit you will be able to expand this article further. I recommend that this article is failed for now and renominated when its better.Jason Rees (talk) 02:05, 30 December 2011 (UTC)
Inks.LWC, if I were you, what I would do is talk more about Fay's life as a tropical disturbance before it was actually a cyclone. Additionally, once it was a cyclone, I would talk more about favorable or unfavorable conditions it encountered and its appearance (convection, banding, etc). Overall, its a nice article, but probably not quite up to Good Article standards. More impact would be nice as well. – TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 02:19, 30 December 2011 (UTC)
I did go through and add from the advisories from the JTWC, wherever information wasn't already stated in the article.  I guess I can go through again and see if I can squeeze out a little more, but there isn't much more to add. Inks.LWC (talk) 03:59, 30 December 2011 (UTC)
Try and get as much as you can. YE  Pacific Hurricane 22:39, 31 December 2011 (UTC)
GA review failed. YE  Pacific Hurricane 03:11, 9 January 2012 (UTC)
I'll get to it when I have time and reapply for GA status, but it would've been nice if you would've included that in your original review comments so that I could've addressed it earlier when I had more time. Inks.LWC (talk) 07:14, 14 January 2012 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Cyclone Fay/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 13:28, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

Lead
In the spring of 2005, the Australian Bureau of Meteorology retired the name Fay from use, and it will never be used again as a cyclone name. can you provide its replacement?
I haven't been able to find the replacement name for Fay. Inks.LWC (talk) 22:09, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
Wouldn't it be Freddy? [1]. Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 23:42, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
I dont think Freddy would be the replacement name as the lists for the region were in 3 lists until 2008.Jason Rees (talk) 00:02, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
Going by the report and the map of the TCWC area of responsiblity, it would have been named by the Darwin TCWC which would mean that Ferdinand replaced Fay. Bidgee (talk) 06:01, 23 June 2012 (UTC)
References
FN#2 link Joint Typhoon Warning Center
FN#4 link The Sydney Morning Herald
FN#5 link The Age
FN#6 link ABC News
Please fix these issues and it passes GA. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 13:28, 20 June 2012 (UTC)

Sorry, I'm not sure I know what you mean by "FN". Inks.LWC (talk) 22:03, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
Footnotes (references) Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 23:42, 20 June 2012 (UTC)
All of the reference links are working for me.  I'm not sure what the problem is. Inks.LWC (talk) 04:11, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
Please re-read, I did not say the references are not working, please link the following in the references that's all. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 19:33, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
Sorry - I didn't realize that's what you were saying, but they're linked now. Inks.LWC (talk) 22:08, 21 June 2012 (UTC)
It's alright I'm passing the article great job btw. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 22:18, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

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