# Talk:Denise O'Sullivan

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Denise O'Sullivan/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:14, 11 January 2021 (UTC)

Comments
There's quite a bit to fix here, so the first pass:

Some overlinking in there, e.g. North Carolina Courage, Chicago Red Stars, Paul Riley etc etc.
Removed dup links Hmlarson (talk) 20:47, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
"Cork Women's FC " -> "Cork City W.F.C."
Done --SuperJew (talk) 14:50, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Pedantically, the Women's National League club in Cork was independent and called "Cork Women's FC" until they merged with the men's League of Ireland club Cork City in 2014. Bring back Daz Sampson (talk) 16:20, 16 January 2021 (UTC)
"She enjoyed" did she?
Re-written. Hmlarson (talk) 20:47, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Newspapers, magazines etc should be in italics.
It looks like this was taken care of, but let me know if there's something specific missed. Hmlarson (talk) 21:05, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Where is height/date of birth referenced?
Added. Hmlarson (talk) 21:05, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
" admired local hero" reads like a tabloid.
Edited. Hmlarson (talk) 20:47, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
"behavior" if this is BritEng, behaviour.
Fixed --SuperJew (talk) 14:58, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
"founded Cork, one" use full and proper name first time round in the prose.
Fixed --SuperJew (talk) 15:01, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Check all claims are cited, e.g. where is " ... against Zhytlobud-1 Kharkiv on 14 August 2014." cited?  not in the following citation, certainly...
" a total of 9 appearances" nine.
Fixed --SuperJew (talk) 15:03, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
"one the title.[38][36] " ref numerical order.
Fixed --SuperJew (talk) 15:03, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
"4-1 " en-dash for scorelines.
Fixed --SuperJew (talk) 15:03, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
"International goals" where are they referenced.
References added. Hmlarson (talk) 22:01, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Don't use hash for No.
Changed --SuperJew (talk) 15:03, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Tynecastle Stadium or Tynecastle Park?
Stadium ref Hmlarson (talk) 21:09, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
" in The 100 Best Female Footballers In The World, listed " our article seems to italicise this, and how runs it, what's the provenance?
I'm not quite understanding the question. Can you reframe The Rambling Man? Hmlarson (talk) 21:09, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Sorry, I meant "who" runs it?  It's not like a FIFA poll is it?  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:16, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Updated italics + added The Guardian. Hmlarson (talk) 22:08, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Spaced hyphens in ref titles should be en-dashes.
Updated ref #7: "Women's (Junior) Wilton United 3 – 1 Longford Town". Blarney United. Hmlarson (talk) 21:11, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
That's enough for a start, on hold for now.  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 11:57, 12 January 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for your review. Hmlarson (talk) 21:09, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
I plan to re-work the lead a bit once we get further along in the review. Thank you. Hmlarson (talk) 22:08, 12 January 2021 (UTC)
Lead updated. Hmlarson (talk) 04:40, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
The table of goals needs to comply with MOS:DTT with row and col scopes.
Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 03:51, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Consistent formatting in refs, i.e. sometimes BBC Sport is italicised.
Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 03:51, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Newspapers, e.g. The Herald, The Sydney Morning Herald etc should be in italics.
Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 03:51, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
What's the strategy on linking publishers/works in the refs, looks a bit random to me.
Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 03:51, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Is it The 42 or the 42 or The42.ie or The42...?
Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 03:51, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Scorelines should use en-dash, e.g. title of ref 63.
Fixed. --SuperJew (talk) 12:06, 18 January 2021 (UTC)
RTE or Raidió Teilifís Éireann?
Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 03:51, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
The above points re ref formats are specific examples: you need to go through all 76 of them and check they are compliant with MOS and consistent with one another.
Updated. Hmlarson (talk) 03:51, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Double-checked and fixed :) (sorry I'm not as quick as you Hmlarson, but am pretty busy at work and with uni rn ;) ) --SuperJew (talk) 21:40, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
Thanks SuperJew. The Rambling Man - these have been updated. Hmlarson (talk) 22:29, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 11:24, 18 January 2021 (UTC)

I'm off to bed soon, so I'll check tomorrow guys, ok?  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 22:35, 19 January 2021 (UTC)
As mentioned above I'm the last person to rush someone else ;) --SuperJew (talk) 09:18, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Okay, some comments on sources, what makes the following WP:RS (pardon my ignorance)?

Cork Beo
Extratime.ie (and why isn't that Extratime.com in ref 6?)
Let me know if there's something specific in WP:RS you have questions about The Rambling Man ref 1, ref 2, ref 3, other articles with CorkBeo refs other articles with Extratime.ie refs Hmlarson (talk) 19:25, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
I'm sure they're used elsewhere but I just wondered what evidence we have that they meet RS?  I don't think I asked about the42, goal.com or dubilnlive though? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:04, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Cork Beo is used in combination with other refs (just added another ref from Sydney Morning Herald to support the "junkyard" title). Anyways you can see their reliability under About Us page. Or I might be misunderstanding and I would appreciate if you give an example of evidence that a source meets RS, say for The Guardian? --SuperJew (talk) 21:12, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
I'll repeat: Let me know if there's something specific in WP:RS you have questions/concerns about for any of those The Rambling Man. Hmlarson (talk)
Well RS usually works the other way round, how do you demonstrate that the sources you're using are RS?  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:04, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
I don't find this particularly constructive. Let me know if you want to move forward. If not, it is what it is. Hmlarson (talk) 21:10, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
I'm sorry you feel that way.  It's a common question to ask how people think certain sources are of sufficient quality and meet RS.  As far as a quick search goes, Corkbeo looks like it's a Daily Mirror offshoot so it's reliability is questionable.  extratime.com is a "volunteer drive (sic) portal" so where's the editorial oversight for it?  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:14, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Regarding Extratime.ie (seems they moved their domain to Extratime.com but still reference themselves as Extratime.ie), they say about them Extratime.ie is the leading provider of information on the League of Ireland. Established in 2008 and run as a volunteer driven portal, the enterprise has gained recognition domestically and internationally as a provider of accurate,innovative and timely news and statistics on the Irish domestic league and associated events such as international fixtures.. Again, I'm not sure what evidence you're looking for The Rambling Man, and seems Hmlarson isn't either. It would be helpful if you could provide an example of demonstration for a source you know meets RS. --SuperJew (talk) 21:17, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Frankly I'm baffled.  WP:RS describes what is meant by reliable sources.  WP:PEREN (for instance) gives a list of known good sources and known verboten sources (like Daily Mirror which must not be used).  Perhaps if you can't demonstrate that these two sources meet the policy, you should ask someone at WP:RSN for their opinion.  Using a website's own blurb about itself is not really suitable evidence.  Do other reliable sources use extratime.ie for instance?  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 21:20, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
I think we can drop Cork Beo as it is used in combination with other refs, so for the info it supports it's reliable enough. Regarding extratime.ie, I tried to search on google, but it's hard to find stuff as all the results are what extratime.ie published. But I might be searching wrong. --SuperJew (talk) 21:30, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
That's why I suggested the WP:RSN, it may have been discussed before or there may be knowledgable people there who can help, and once something is given a green light there, it tends to be a healthy precedent to point at for all future conversations around reliability for a given source. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 22:00, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Ok I added a question there. --SuperJew (talk) 22:38, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
In what sense is the Daily Mirror supposed to be "verboten" @The Rambling Man:? At your linked list of deprecated sources it only says there is no consensus (and deprecated ≠ verboten, although I don't want to open that can of worms). If we exclude every single source published by Trinity Mirror, as you seem to be implying, we would be ruling out half the local newspapers in the UK and Ireland. Bring back Daz Sampson (talk) 17:19, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
No, you're right, it uses the warning triangle there.  But if we can avoid using tabloid papers, so much the better.  I note "Cork Beo"'s own "ethics" statement uses the phrase "The maintenance of high editorial standards is at the core of the Irish Mirror's business philosophy." so if this is the Irish Mirror then we can do better.  I never mentioned Trinity Mirror.  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 17:28, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
But honestly, I've asked for evidence that both these two are WP:RS.  It's incumbent on the nominator(s) to demonstrate that, not for me to demonstrate that they are not reliable sources.  If you want this review punted back to GAN, by all means that's fine.  I'm sure another editor will simply just give it the green light and we can all move on with our lives.  I just asked a simple (very common) question and was met with hostility which I don't need in my life at this time.  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 17:30, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
No hostility intended - I just asked a question for my own clarification then you seem to have gone in a huff! Bring back Daz Sampson (talk) 17:48, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
 Hey @The Rambling Man: Based on my previous interactions with Hmlarson and with BbDS, I don't think there was any hostility intended by them. They're both hardworking editors who are aiming to build this Wikipedia, especially improving the scope of women's soccer, bettering pages, and making sure stuff is notable and well-fleshed (not just a bunch of presumed notability stubs as some editors do). On a personal note, I definitely did not intend any hostility, and I do apologise if it felt that way. I just honestly do not have experience in determining if a source is RS or not and wanted to understand. And I really appreciate the time you're putting into this review to help better the article.
Now regarding the questions in hand:
Regarding the Cork Beo source, it was used in two places. In one of them I completely replaced it with a different source (The Sydney Morning Herald) and in the other I added another source supporting the saying. So I think it is irrelevant if it isn't fully RS - it is RS enough to be a supporting reference with another one (I think we should keep it as it words the point sourced better).
Regarding the Extratime.ie sources, I put in the question for WP:RSN as you kindly suggested, and you can see there that the users who answered say it is an RS for soccer and Irish soccer players.
I hope this takes care of the issues at hand :) --SuperJew (talk) 18:46, 21 January 2021 (UTC)
Final comments on the article and refs:

Is it MDY or DMY?
DMY - Only American and Canadian English is MDY. --SuperJew (talk) 14:59, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Ideally images should have alt text.
Added.Hmlarson (talk) 19:05, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
I would leave the FC's in the publishers, i.e. Glasgow City because it's unclear if that's some council or govt organisation, or the football club.
Personally, I think it's clear from context, but fixed. --SuperJew (talk) 14:59, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Ref 41 missing accessdate
Added. --SuperJew (talk) 14:59, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Ref 48 missing accessdate
Added. --SuperJew (talk) 14:59, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Ref 65, 66 score shouldn't be spaced.
Fixed. --SuperJew (talk) 14:59, 20 January 2021 (UTC)
Then I think we're there!  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 11:41, 20 January 2021 (UTC)

The Rambling Man - are you waiting on anything else on this GAN? Thanks for your review. Hmlarson (talk)
The Rambling Man - just noticed your change on the Talk page to Second Opinion - but you've not included: "Be sure the review page specifies in what way you are looking for a second opinion." (#3 at WP:GAN/I#2O). Are you sure you don't want the credit for the review you've already done all the work for? If you don't, can you please indicate that the second opinion reviewer should be looking at specifically? Thanks. Hmlarson (talk) 03:13, 28 January 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Denise O'Sullivan/GA2. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 10:28, 1 March 2021 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful. 
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy. 
Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.


### Immediate Failures
It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -


### Links
### Prose
#### Lede
North Carolina Courage of the National Women's Soccer League - whilst this is fine, perhaps we should mention that this is in the USA, as unless you put together "North Carolina", there's nothing here suggesting this is in the states. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Added. --SuperJew (talk) 09:28, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
career with Wilton United - I'm assuming this was an Irish team of some sort. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Added nationality. --SuperJew (talk) 09:58, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
She also guested for Peamount United - what does "guested" mean in this context? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Replaced with "played" as can't find any sources supporting guest player status. --SuperJew (talk) 11:31, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
Carolina is a duplicate link. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Removed duplicate. --SuperJew (talk) 10:29, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
Most Valuable Player (MVP) - do we need to initialise here? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Uncapitalised --SuperJew (talk) 10:30, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
The lede seems to omit that she has 80 caps for her country. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:32, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Added. --SuperJew (talk) 11:33, 9 March 2021 (UTC)


#### General
I'm not sure what the quotebox adds. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:39, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
I reckon it gives some insight of the player on herself. Do you think it should be removed? --SuperJew (talk) 11:38, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
with Wilton United - which is? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:39, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Added club nationality --SuperJew (talk) 10:53, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
paid Glasgow an undisclosed "four figure" transfer fee - is this a quote? Undisclosed is probably enough. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:39, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
the source says "The move, for an undisclosed four-figure sum, marks the first time a Scottish women’s club has received compensation for a player." I expanded with it being the first time a Scottish etc. I think the term four figure gives an order of magnitude for the fee. --SuperJew (talk) 10:55, 2 March 2021 (UTC)
I suggest merging the three loan spells into one subsection. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:39, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Merged. --SuperJew (talk) 12:22, 9 March 2021 (UTC)


### GA Review
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Review meta comments
I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:28, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Hi, what does "original reviewer unavailable but review is 98% complete" mean exactly? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 11:18, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
@Lee Vilenski: The page was originally reviewed for GA at Talk:Denise O'Sullivan/GA1 by The Rambling Man. Most of the issues were dealt with. The only issue that remained was regarding whether the sources from Cork Beo and from Extratime.ie are reliable. There seems to have been a few short circuits in communications and The Rambling Man decided not to pass the review. The issues about these sources were actually dealt with - the Cork Beo reference was replaced with a The Sydney Morning Herald reference and regarding the Extratime.ie references, I asked at WP:RSN, where the consensus was that it is reliable for Irish soccer players. --SuperJew (talk) 12:13, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
Sure, I think I was more asking who is nominating the article for GAN this time? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 12:33, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
It's Hmlarson who is nominating it and nominated it last time :) (I just like helping them with small fixes and stuff, but they do the heavy lifting on these ;) ) --SuperJew (talk) 13:03, 1 March 2021 (UTC)
@Lee Vilenski: Hey Lee :) All the issues above have been addressed. Is there anything else needed? --SuperJew (talk) 12:24, 9 March 2021 (UTC)