# Talk:Lionhearted

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Nominator: Skyshifter (talk · contribs) 21:53, 2 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar): 

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section): 

b. (citations to reliable sources): 

c. (OR): 

d. (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects): 

b. (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): 

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/fail: 

(Criteria marked  are unassessed)
We are reunited once again for this review! --K. Peake 06:30, 20 June 2024 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
The infobox recording date of 2014 is not sourced in the body anywhere
Removed
WP:OVERLINK of Porter Robinson under songwriters
Fixed
Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
Fixed
The first sentence should mention it being from his debut studio album, Worlds (2014)
Added
Move the release sentence to the fourth of the paragraph instead and change to the album rather than its title
Did something similar to "Sad Machine". Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
"The track was one of" → "It was one of"
Done
I would suggest starting a new para at the Passion Pit and re-word it to something like "The song was noted for the influence from Passion Pit."
Did something similar to "Sad Machine". Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
Add after the above sentence one about the song's critical reviews
As with "Sad Machine" I prefer adding sentences regarding reviews only when sources explicitly comment on it. In the case of "Sad Machine", critics generally agreed on its atmospheric feeling, but here I don't think there's an easy way to summarize the reviews, otherwise it would get too extensive. However I added another sentence saying that critics noted that "it was the first on Worlds with a faster tempo". Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
"a music video was" → "an accompanying music video was" with the wikilink, add info about the synopsis too
Done
Mention which charts it entered
I think that's too much info considering the length of  the article; it would be almost the same as the last paragraph of "Release and reception".


### Background and composition
Add info about the synths to the audio sample too
I don't see that info in the article, but I added that "Multiple critics found it influenced by Passion Pit".
Add the release year of Space Invaders in brackets
Done
Pipe electro-house to Electro house
Done
Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication)
Done
"found it inspired by Passion Pit" → "found it inspired by the band" to avoid using their name so much
Done
Merge the Las Vegas Weekly and Spin sentences by using a comma with "while"
I don't think these sentences are related enough, unlike the previous one about Passion Pit.


### Release and reception
"On June 3, "Lionhearted" was" → "On June 3, 2014, "Lionhearted" was" and move [6] to being solely at the end of the sentence
Done
"on the 17th, accompanied by a music video" → "on June 17, accompanied by a music video" with the wikilink
Done
Put parts of the longer reviews quoted into your own words per MOS:OVERQUOTE
Done
'St Elmo's Fire' should be surrounded by single speech marks and piped to St Elmo's fire
Done
Pipe Variance to Variance (magazine)
Done
Pipe Beat to Beat (magazine)
That's a red link, and it's currently linked to Beat Magazine.
"described it as" → "described the song as"
Done
Mention what the positions the song charted at were, although I do not see the Ultratop Dance one sourced
Done


### Track listing
Good


### Personnel
Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel
Done


### Charts
#### Weekly charts
I can not see the Dance position in the source


#### Year-end charts
Good


### Release history
Worldwide → Various
Done
You need to add sources for these releases
Done


### References
Copyvio score checks out since nothing shows up and there is not violations of quotes I see myself anyway!!
What is DJ Times and why is it reliable on ref 2?
WP:ABOUTSELF should apply as I'm just using Robinson's words here. Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
Pipe AXS to AXS (company) on ref 5
Done
Pipe Consequence of Sound to Consequence (publication) on ref 7
Done
Rather than being in the title, cite Apple Music as publisher with the wikilink on ref 13
Done
Pipe Variance to Variance (magazine) on ref 16
Done
Pipe Beat to Beat (magazine) on ref 17
That's a red link, and it's currently linked to Beat Magazine.


### External links
Link to music video in the infobox instead of here
Keeping both Skyshiftertalk 21:19, 20 June 2024 (UTC)


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed; this went by very quickly! --K. Peake 20:33, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: all responded! Skyshiftertalk 21:36, 20 June 2024 (UTC)
Skyshifter I have done some copy editing for you now, although you still need to add various sources to back up the Apple Music releases being in various locations; try about three or four regions please. --K. Peake 09:09, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: I'm having trouble with that (i.e. I can't find the Lionhearted single on streaming services) so I've removed the section. Skyshiftertalk 09:20, 21 June 2024 (UTC)
 Pass now, well done on cleaning this up! --K. Peake 11:20, 21 June 2024 (UTC)