# Talk:Daniel McBreen

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Reviewer: Royroydeb (talk · contribs) 08:00, 9 July 2015 (UTC)

after his father took up an offer to play football for Edgeworth Eagles. - Which year? /How old was McBreen?
Well, in 1977 when he was six weeks old...! Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
debut later that year - later?
Removed. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
and scored six goals from 23 appearances - 6 goals from 23 appearances
Per WP:NUMERAL, "Integers from zero to nine are spelled out in words". Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
making 38 appearances but only scoring eight goals,
See above. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
came in November 2006 - only November is enough
Per WP:CONSISTENCY and WP:STO, I always add the year to any dates. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
... after buying out the remainder.... - I think the entire sentence should be reworded
Reworded. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
seven appearances and one goal - here the number are in words
See above. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
defeat to Sydney  - the club is known as Sydney FC
Done. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
"He made 31 appearances and scored five goals", " four goals from 30 matches "
See above.
his contract expired in May 2015. - The infobox still shows him as a South China player
Updated. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
provides a threat at set pieces. - Isnt it someone's opinion?
I guess so, as is the sentence preceding it, but it is cited by a reliable source. Mattythewhite (talk) 18:18, 15 July 2015 (UTC)
RRD13 দেবজ্যোতি (talk) 17:59, 14 July 2015 (UTC)
Mattythewhite