# Talk:John Kourkouas

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Clarify pronouns--for example:

From this post he played a role, first in the consolidation of Romanos Lekapenos' position as regent over Constantine VII, and eventually his ascent to the post of senior emperor in 919–920.  Whose ascent to the post of senior emperor?  Romanos Lekapenos? or Constantine VII?
Ok, fixed. Constantine   ✍  22:39, 21 October 2009 (UTC)
Translations of Greek--for example:

His brother, Theophilos Kourkouas, replaced Boelas as strategos of Chaldia and in charge of this northernmost sector of the eastern frontier. His brother, Theophilos Kourkouas, replaced Boelas as army leader, or strategos, of Chaldia and in charge of this northernmost sector of the eastern frontier.
Hmmm, I thought it was clear, that since Boelas was governor, and Kourkouas replaced him, that strategos=governor. Apparently not... ;) Constantine   ✍  22:39, 21 October 2009 (UTC)
Unclear meanings--for example:

At the same time, the Abbasid Caliphate progressively decayed...  The Caliphate decayed? Or its power?  At the same time (or concurrently), the authority of the Abbasid Caliphate decayed (diminished).  At the same time, the Abbasid Caliphate undermined its own authority by....; at the same time, corruption and vice undermined the military and cultural authority of the Abbasid Caliphate ...
under Al-Muqtadir (r. 908–932) the Caliphate was in disarray, facing revolts and a weakening of its hold on the more distant provinces, where local dynasties emerged.]  ?? Finally, under Al Mutqtadir (r. 908-932) the Caliphate lost its hold on such distant provinces as ...(examples?) As the Abbasid Caliphate's central hold on Byzantium declined, ...

I rephrased this entirely, hopefully it's OK now. As for the specific provinces, this was a phenomenon current throughout the Caliphate (which was never that centralized in the first place), that varied in extent and in the level of autonomy these dynasties enjoyed: the emirates on the Byzantine frontier and in the Caucasus, all internally autonomous but still subject to the Caliph, are one example, while the Hamdanids, practically independent rulers, are another. I really don't feel I can go into too much detail here. The situation should become clear as one reads the article, where the local emirates are left to fend for themselves or operate independently of whatever Baghdad was doing. Constantine   ✍  22:39, 21 October 2009 (UTC)
I made a few minor tweaks.  this is looking much better.  Auntieruth55 (talk) 22:07, 21 October 2009 (UTC)

Again, thanks a lot for your help. Very much appreciated, as it is really hard for me to judge what parts a reader who is not familiar with the subject can understand or not. Cheers, Constantine   ✍  22:39, 21 October 2009 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:John Kourkouas/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk) 20:03, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
I reviewed this at its Military History peer review, and I'm happy to look at it again for GA.  I'll be posting some comments in the next 24 hours.  Auntieruth55 (talk) 20:03, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

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