# Talk:Charlottesville and Albemarle Railway

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 01:44, 9 August 2013 (UTC)
I'll be glad to take this review. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:44, 9 August 2013 (UTC)


### Initial comments
At first pass, this looks quite good. It's comprehensive, well sourced, and well written, and seems generally ripe for promotion. I've made a few tweaks as I went; feel free to revert any with which you disagree.
Here are a few quibbles that I couldn't immediately resolve myself:

I'd suggest splitting the lead into two paragraphs for readability--perhaps at "Increased expenses and decreasing ridership"?
 Done
"with two railroad stations in operation, one on the C&O line and the Union Station just west of the C&O station at the junction between the C&O and Southern railroads" -- I found this part of the sentence hard to follow at first glance; maybe break this off as a second sentence: "two railroad stations in operation. One was on the C&O line, and the second, the Union Station, was just west..." Am I understanding the meaning correctly in this rewrite?
You are correct.  I have reworded as you suggested. MountainRail (talk) 22:55, 11 August 2013 (UTC)
"Development of the streetcar system" -- I'd suggest breaking this long paragraph into at least two for readability (Perhaps at "this continued until...")
 Done
Route Description -- split large paragraph for readability
I split the paragraph before describing the location of the passing sidings.  MountainRail (talk) 22:55, 11 August 2013 (UTC)
Two statements here that it would be better to fix in time per WP:REALTIME for clarity in the long-term:
To address these issues, the city has begun planning and analyzing various methods of public transportation for implementation within Charlottesville, one of which includes the development of a streetcar system. ("in the early 2000s, the city began...") -  Done
though no concrete plans have been developed or implemented ("as of 2012") -  Done
The track gauge given in the infobox needs a source -- Khazar2 (talk) 16:52, 11 August 2013 (UTC) -  Done
Thank you for taking the time to review this article!  I believe I have addressed all the issues above.  Thanks! MountainRail (talk) 22:55, 11 August 2013 (UTC)
Thank you for the quick fixes. Sorry for the delay in responding; Mrs. Khazar and I somewhat unexpectedly bought a house yesterday! It was a great purchase, but has, needless to say, thrown us into a bit of disarray.
I'll do the checklist now, but I imagine this is ready to pass. --Khazar2 (talk) 17:05, 14 August 2013 (UTC)


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