# Talk:Fushigi (song)

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Nominator: IanTEB (talk · contribs) 21:26, 16 January 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:34, 26 February 2025 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar): 

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section): 

b. (citations to reliable sources): 

c. (OR): 

d. (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects): 

b. (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): 

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/fail: 

(Criteria marked  are unassessed)
I will review this over today and tomorrow! --K. Peake 17:34, 26 February 2025 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
"released it as a" → "released the song as a" and move this to the sentence before the love song one instead
"Hoshino wrote "Fushigi" for the" → "Hoshino wrote it for the"
 Not done: this doesn't seem to be a fast rule, since articles like "You Belong with Me" (FA) also lists release before writing in the lead. Personally, I prefer this method since it connects the writing to the critic-interpreted result (composition).
"he penned and produced the track alone," → "Hoshino penned and produced the song alone," as a new sentence
 Not done, per the wording at "You Belong with Me". Keeping "track" to avoid repetetive use of "song".
""Fushigi" is an" → "it is an"
"Music critics enjoyed "Fushigi" for" → "Music critics praised the song for" to use more suitable language about critics
I've changed the wording here differently; I dislike using strong generalizations like "praised" when based on only a small amount of reviewers.
"Hoshino performed "Fushigi" at" → "Hoshino performed the song at"
Are there any policies, guidelines, or a rule of thumb for these changes?


### Background and writing
The source for the first paragraph's last sentence does not mention Mabanua as a co-arranger
There is a line under Credits, "Co-Arrangement: mabanua"
[8] sources heart-pounding, not heartache unless my translator is faulty
These words basically mean the same thing; I've kept heartache since I think it fits the best among translations listed among dictionaries. Heart-warming, emotional, or even "cutesy" may also be better alternatives, though these weren't listed in most of the dictionaries that I looked at.
The synthesizer heavy part is not showing on my translator and "Hajimari wa Itsu mo Ame" does not appear to be mentioned itself
I can see it in Real Sound ([2]). Did you check the second page?


### Composition and lyrics
"Watanabe mixed it, and" → "while Watanabe handled mixing and"
I've changed it to "while Watanabe mixed it and Takahiro Uchida handled mastering" to avoid a blue sea situation if a page is made for Uchida.
Audio sample looks good!
""Fushigi" is a mellow" → "Musically, "Fushigi" is a mellow"
 Not done: this is a composition section, so starting the main topic with "Musically" is like starting a release section with "Release-wise, it was issued as a single ..." There is a good argument for the removal of "Lyrically," as well (FA "Like I'm Gonna Lose You" uses neither musically or lyrically) but I've kept it to mark a change in subject from composition to lyrics.
[16] does not source anything for the second sentence of the second para
 Fixed; I had incorrectly entered the link of a Rockin'On Japan article
"the latter called its" → "Ogiwara called the song's" as a new sentence since the current one is a run-on
 Done


### Release and commercial performance
"in February of the same year." → "in February 2021."
 Done
Second para looks good!
"Writing for Billboard, Hitoshi Kurimoto stated" → "Writing for Billboard Japan, Hitoshi Kurimoto stated" with the wikilink
 Done


### Critical reception
"Azuki Ogiwara for Real Sound wrote that" → "Ogiwara for Real Sound wrote that"
"Rockin'On Japan's Emi Sugiura believed" → "Rockin'On Japan's Sugiura believed"
"Joshua Minsoo Kim found Hoshino's message" → "Kim found Hoshino's message"
Since the reception section is so far from composition, I don't want to assume that readers have read both and have therefore kept the full names. For similar reasons, full names are repeated in a lot of FAs, as well.
Mikiki should not be italicised
As a print magazine published by Tower Records Japan, I believe italics are appropriate.
The progression and analog synths are not mentioned by [16]
This should be fixed
"similarly, Daisuke Sawada (a different writer for Mikiki) described" → "similarly, Mikiki writer Daisuke Sawada described" to be less wordy
 Done


### Promotion and other usage
Img looks good!
Wouldn't it be more suitable to mention the 26 million figure from [45] since that is later in time?
 Added: I only searched for a source to back up the award and didn't actually see that this was in there, thanks for pointing that out! I've incorporated alongside the initial view number from Skream!, and split it into a different sentence from the awards.
"via a ninety-minute special" → "via a 90-minute special" per MOS:NUM
MOS:NUM actually states: "Integers greater than nine expressible in one or two words may be expressed either in numerals or in words (16 or sixteen, 84 or eighty-four, 200 or two hundred", so ninety would be appropriate.
Shouldn't you write "the penultimate number" instead since penultimate always means the one before closer?
 Done
"he performed it for" → "he performed the song for"
 Done


### Track listing
Good


### Credits and personnel
Good


### Charts
#### Weekly charts
Good


#### Year-end charts
This should not be sortable
 Fixed


### Certifications
Good


### See also
Good


### Notes
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks brilliant at 6.5%!!!!
Cite Mikiki as publisher instead and remove Tower Records Japan from ref 16, although is this the correct URL since it is not Mikiki's website?
Mikiki is a magazine so it has been kept as such; link has been amended and Tower Records removed
Ditto for ref 38's publisher
 Done
Cite ASCII Games as publisher instead on ref 49
 Done


### External links
Good


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed, great job here and best of luck! --K. Peake 11:42, 27 February 2025 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: I believe all issues have been addressed. IanTEB (talk) 14:49, 28 February 2025 (UTC)
@IanTEB: I would still say in the lead, you need to change the release part to "released the song as a" to avoid using it twice in one sentence and start a new sentence at the penned and produced part to avoid a run-on. As for the repetition of full names in reception, I disagree with your reasoning since those FA's are longer articles and there is just a three paragraph section between comp and reception here. --K. Peake 09:24, 1 March 2025 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: Changing to "released the song as a" would only create a new problem since "song" is used later in the sentence, as well. Starting a new sentence intead of a semi-colon would not help since semi-colons are most often used for preventing run-on sentences while still connecting the clauses. Since both "He took inspiration from..." and "he penned and produced the track alone" are about its writing, I believe this is appropriate; I also found it helps with flow in regards to varying the sentence length. I've removed full names in the reception section, but kept the site names. I hope this serves as a good compromise. IanTEB (talk) 17:51, 1 March 2025 (UTC)
I am still unsure about the release sentence; maybe you needn't introduce "Create" as the song since this is implied from it being a double A-side and the speech marks? K. Peake 21:27, 1 March 2025 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: I think that is probably the best solution. I have amended the lead. IanTEB (talk) 22:39, 1 March 2025 (UTC)
 Pass now, I changed the wording slightly but not the usage of title or the song. --K. Peake 08:44, 2 March 2025 (UTC)