# Talk:Capture of Grenada (1779)

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 15:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)
I'll start this review shortly. Interesting topic!  MathewTownsend (talk) 15:05, 20 December 2011 (UTC)

Review
Lede
"French forces were reembarked on the fleet" - I guess these is military terminology but I'm not sure what it means
"Embarkation" is a fairly well-defined concept independent of military uses... Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Background
"augmenting the fleet of Admiral Samuel Barrington" - so he was already there? (I must have missed that.)
The Royal Navy had more-or-less permanent stations in the West Indies.  I didn't think any specific reference this (or the arrival of its most recent commander) was particularly necessary.  I've added words mentioning Barrington's post. Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
"the French at Martinique" - on Martinique? Fixed Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
"Governor the marquis de Bouillé" - looks funny. Should it be Governer François Claude Amour?
Nobles are generally referred to by their title, so your suggestion would be wrong (or at least bad form).  I've rephrased to make it less awkward. Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
French capture
"called for three columns to attack the back side of the fortifications with the bayonet" - with bayonets? Fixed Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Aftermath
What is the significant of John Paul Jones attending the performance?
Nothing particularly significant, but I thought it an interesting bit of color. Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
"In order to better defend against a similar attack to the one they launched" - I don't quite understand this sentence - maybe it's me. Rephrased Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
"The divisions in Grenadian society" - social divisions? military divisions?  Clarified Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Caption
"French political cartoon depicting acclamation of d'Estaing for his successes on Grenada and against Byron "- sounds funny. Rephrased Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Everything else looks fine. A very clear, concise article.
I made a few copy edits that you are free to reverse.[1]
MathewTownsend (talk) 21:04, 20 December 2011 (UTC)

Thank you for taking the time to review; I think I've addressed your concerns.  Let me know if not... Magic♪piano 16:06, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
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B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary: 

C. No original research: 

Is it broad in its coverage?
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Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc: 

Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales: 

B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions: 

Overall:
Pass or Fail: 

Your careful writing and presentation is much appreciated!
MathewTownsend (talk) 17:03, 21 December 2011 (UTC)