# Talk:French ironclad Furieux

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Reviewer: Harrias (talk · contribs) 14:02, 5 March 2020 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this. Harrias talk 14:02, 5 March 2020 (UTC)

Design
"..identical to Tonnerre, though with a slightly longer and narrower hull." Surely this is a contradiction? "near-identical" maybe?
Done
"..the placement of the gun aft required.." Is this right? It feels like it should be "the aft gun"?
What I was getting at was moving one of the guns from the forward turret to a position aft - see if how I reworded it makes more sense
"She had an armor deck that was 91 mm (3.6 in) that was connected to the top.." I think the second "that was" could be removed and replaced with a comma?
Done
In the first part of this section, the gun measurements are given in cm, but in the modifications, it switches to mm, which I found a little confusing.
All fixed - I have a habit of using cm from all the German ships I've done, but the French designated their guns in mm.
Service history
"That year, she took part in a mobilization exercise in 1888.." Remove "in 1888".
Done
"..visiting the ports on Lisbon, Portugal.." "of", not "on".
Good catch
"..Lisbon, Portugal, Ferrol, Vigo, and Villagarcia, Spain, Cadiz, Morocco, and Tangiers, French Algeria." I'm confused by the format of this; mainly the placement of Cadiz, which is in Spain, after Spain, implying that it is in Morocco?
Whoops, fixed
"Tenders for the boilers were solicited in June 1898 and Belleville models being selected, to be manufactured by Indret." Replace "being" with "were".
Done
"..during which time trials of the new guns.." Can this be rephrased slightly? At first I misread it as "during which time trials of the new guns"!
Done
The image caption says "Furieux as a depot ship during World War I", but this doesn't appear in the main text, nor is it referenced.
Fixed
References
References are all to reliable sources, and are consistently formatted in an appropriate style.
Images
All images are appropriately tagged and captioned (other than noted above).
Consider adding alt text, but it isn't a GA requirement.
Nice work, as usual. Nothing major here. Harrias talk 20:37, 11 March 2020 (UTC)

Thanks Harrias. Parsecboy (talk) 11:56, 12 March 2020 (UTC)