# Talk:Ciutat Morta

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 20:20, 18 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:20, 18 March 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for the review so far, the article is improved for it. I've answered everything with some queries, see what you think. Mujinga (talk) 11:51, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
re "expanding #Production to meet the third criteria" I added some lines yesterday and I've added some more today from the last review I found. I've also put in the academic analysis that was previously in further reading. I don't think this film will ever have a production section the size of say Blade Runner 2049, I'm happy the main aspects are covered. Back to you, thanks! Mujinga (talk) 11:38, 21 March 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Improve the non-free use rationale for the poster with this template.
 Done Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
"Poster" → "Promotional release poster"
 Done Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Don't use "<br />" in the infobox. Use "plainlist" instead.
is this a MOS issue? Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Well, it says on the film infobox template that plainlist is preferred, and it also helps mobile readers.
Those are good reasons, thanks.  Done Mujinga (talk) 11:17, 21 March 2021 (UTC)
In the lead, remove the comma after "until 2015".
I've read it a few times, I prefer it with the comma. Could rephrase if it's a big issue. Might be a British English / US English thing? Mujinga (talk) 10:02, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
The issue was that the sentence is kinda short, so a comma wasn't necessary.


### Plot
This section is over 400 words, so that passes WP:FILMPLOT.
Remove the comma after "hit on the head".
agreed on that one Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Add a comma after the first naming of Rodrigo Lanza.
in the brackets? I'd rather not add one there Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
I see your point; it was an Oxford comma thing.
Remove the comma after "Alfredo Pestana".
that one seems good to keep since the commas are bracketing the names Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Add a comma after "they looked".
i didn't add the comma but i did rephrase since the sentence was clunky Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
"son of diplomat" → "son of a diplomat"
 Done Mujinga (talk) 10:08, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


### Themes
Add a comma after "gentrification".
don't see the need for it, we must have different comma styles Mujinga (talk) 10:10, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Yeah, it was another Oxford comma thing.
Other than that, this section looks good.


### Production
"seven-storey" → "seven-story"
"storey" is BrEng Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Add a comma after "Guàrdia Urbana".
again, not seeing the need for it Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
"decide" → "decided"
 Done good spot! Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
This section is extremely short, so try expanding it.
I'll have a look to see if there are any more sources since November when I wrote it. Mujinga (talk) 10:12, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
I've added a few more lines Mujinga (talk) 11:35, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
added in the academic analysis from further reading Mujinga (talk) 11:35, 21 March 2021 (UTC)


### Release
Add a comma after "June 8, 2013".
agreed! Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
"action" → "act"
yeah that makes sense Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
"department" → "Department"
rephrased tighter to source Mujinga (talk) 10:17, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


### Critical response
The word "onesidedness" doesn't sound right, so maybe reword it?
went back to the source, rephrased Mujinga (talk) 10:24, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Add more reviews (if possible).
I'll have another check although this is all I could find before Mujinga (talk) 10:24, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
added two more reviews Mujinga (talk) 11:49, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


### Legacy
Remove the comma after "Guàrdia Urbana".
i rather keep it, since it provides a space for breath. Mujinga (talk) 10:27, 20 March 2021 (UTC)
Add a comma after "Cs, PP".
i rather not add one Mujinga (talk) 10:27, 20 March 2021 (UTC)


### Progress