# Talk:Needham B. Broughton

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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 15:29, 12 September 2019 (UTC)


### Review
Will review. Stay tuned! MX (✉ • ✎) 15:29, 12 September 2019 (UTC)

@MX: I've responded to your comments. -Indy beetle (talk) 23:02, 23 September 2019 (UTC)


#### Criteria
Style – Exceptional. My only issue here is the size of the lead per the requirements below and the section called Biography.
Verifiability – No issues here, other than a tiny citation fix below.
Neutrality – Very neutral in tone.
Stability – No large updates since last year; minor updates this year.
Illustration – Image found; licensed correctly.
Copyright – All good here, too.


#### Lead paragraph
Size – Given the size of the article (the body paragraphs), the article's lead is too long, per MOS:LEADLENGTH. Please trim down to two if possible.
Done.


#### Infobox
Age – Please add his age at the time of his death. You may want to add the appropriate conversion templates for this.
Done.
Death place - Per consistency, please add "United States" after Philadelphia, Pennsylvania. If you think it's too long, keep "U.S." even for his POB and for this one too. Same goes for Historic Oakwood Cemetery, Raleigh, North Carolina.
Done.


#### Biography
Section header – OK, so we already know this is a biography of his life. Having a section header called "Biography" is redundant and not needed. I would replace this smaller section with "Early life and family" or something like that. Make sure to not keep the other sections as subsections of this.
Headings revised.
farm near Auburn, North Carolina to Joseph Broughton – Comma after North Carolina
Done.
In 1856, Broughton moved to Raleigh, North Carolina – Ditto
Done.


#### Printing career
Broughton traveled to Richmond, Virginia – Ditto
Done.
He then set type for the New York Herald – I believe "set type" is an idiom. I had no idea what it was until I looked it up. Consider rephrasing for our international readers unfamiliar with this. Not sure here so please confirm.
North Carolina Master Printers' Association and North Carolina Merchants' Association – What are your thoughts on redlinking these two associations? They seem to have some sources about them online.
Redlinked.


#### Religious activities
Broughton was made a deacon – I would link deacon for those unfamiliar with the term. Good section overall.
Linked.


#### Involvement in public affairs
Due to his religious beliefs, Broughton was a member of the temperance movement and a strong supporter of the prohibition of the sale and consumption of alcohol.[4][18] For five years he was Grand Chief Templar of the North Carolina Order of Good Templars.[19] – Unsure about this one, but do you think this part could / should be included in the previous section about his religious activities? You can still keep the fact that he convinced the African Methodist Episcopal Zion bishop to rally black voters in this section, since that deals more with "public affairs" than with "religious activities".
Considering the way the article is currently structured the "Religious activities" primarily has to do with his service in religious organizations. Temperance had many religious—particularly Evangelical Christian supporters—but was not purely a religious movement. The Order of Good Templars  was also primarily concerned with temperance and not religion. Thus I think its best to leave Broughton's activism on this public issue under Public affairs.


#### Death
All good here


#### Legacy
All good here


#### Citations
Ranii, David (November 17, 2002). "Former North Carolina Commerce Recruitment Chief, Thomas Broughton, Dies". Knight Ridder Tribune Business News. p. 1. Retrieved November 25, 2018. – When I click the source, it takes me to a proxy site. If we need a subscription or membership to log-in, please add the appropriate format using this here. I recently wrote an article that uses a lot of sources that require a subscription. See the format here (with the red lock) in case you need to reference it.
De-linked. It was through proquest through my university, which I don't think really helps anyone.