# Talk:Danton Heinen

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)
Shall review MWright96 (talk) 21:36, 22 October 2021 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Lead
Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League  Done
junior hockey can be wikilinked to Junior ice hockey  Done
"Heinen earned NCHC Rookie of the Year in 2014–15 and NCHC Forward of the Year in 2015-16." - please specify that the years highlighted in bold are seasons  Done
The above dashes in the seasons can be replaced by en dashes (–) per MOS:DASH  Done
Maybe add briefly Heinen's senior ice hockey career to date  Done


### Early career
Wikilink Richmond Sockeyes and Pacific Junior Hockey League  Done
"While with the Sockeyes in the 2012–13 season, he recorded 63 points" - The Abbotsford News does not mention his points total but Elite Prospects does  Done


### Collegiate
Dup link for Denver Pioneers men's ice hockey  Done
I think the terms goals and assists can be wikilinked to their respective articles  Done
"entry-level contract with the Boston Bruins" - how many years would the entry-level contract last for?  Done


### Boston Bruins
Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting  Done
"in seven of the team's nine games." - little bit too close to the source material  Done
"Heinen was selected for th 2017 AHL All-Star Game" - the word highlighted in bold is a typo  Done
"He played three games with the Providence Bruins before being recalled on October 26, 2017," - maybe add Heinen scored three assist during his three-game period with the Providence Bruins  Done
"described as having a "200-foot game." - described by whom?
MWright96 It says on a third line head coach Bruce Cassidy described as having a "200-foot game." Should I re-word this?
Struck MWright96 (talk) 21:11, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
"He was also a healthy scratch" - what does this mean?  Done
"for two games in October and again the first week of February." - wording of this portion of text is too close to the original source material  Done


### Anaheim Ducks
Wikilink free agent to the appropriate article  Done


### Pittsburgh Penguins
"After attending their training camp," - needs verifying with a reliable source  Done
Dup link for Tampa Bay Lighting  Done
"and he scored his first goal as a Penguin that same night" - don't think the text highlighted in bold is encyclopedic  Done


### References
The title of Reference 11 "FINALISTS NAMED FOR NCHC INDIVIDUAL AWARDS" should not be in all capital letters per MOS:ALLCAPS  Done
Reference 45's title "A cup full of spoiler: Penguins blitz champion Lightning, 6-2, in season opener without stars" should contain a en dash where the hyphen is bolded per MOS:DASH  Done
Shall put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the above points MWright96 (talk) 17:15, 23 October 2021 (UTC)

MWright96, is it better? HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:58, 28 October 2021 (UTC)
@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Quite better. Now promoting to GA class MWright96 (talk) 21:11, 28 October 2021 (UTC)