# Talk:Negussie Roba

@InvadingInvader: Wondering, what parts of the article do you think are promotional (what phrases specifically)? BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:58, 27 December 2023 (UTC)

Happy to help (and thanks again on the HEY improvements). Personally I think that you could avoid directly quoting the papers too much. Avoid wording such as "talented athlete" as this would serve to unduly promote the subject. Usage of  "glory and fame" without attributing who said it directly in the text also seems to be a bit problematic.
On a separate note, consider sectionalizing the biography and inserting a table of his wins/victories if possible. InvadingInvader (userpage, talk) 03:03, 27 December 2023 (UTC)
I attributed all the quotes and removed the "talented" phrasing (I think the quotes I have are alright - since it seems 4/5 of the article are not quotes). I also added sections, but there wasn't much about tournaments participated in besides the Olympics, so I did not add a table. I'm removing the promotional tag but feel free to restore it and let me know if you think there's still issues. BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:57, 4 January 2024 (UTC)