# Talk:Delphian Club

@DGG: You added Template:Overly detailed on this article today. Since the article is fairly short and I wrote it myself from scratch recently, I hope we can quickly develop a consensus here on how to resolve that issue you raised. What content in the article do you think is overly detailed? Dugan Murphy (talk) 20:54, 7 September 2021 (UTC)
1. the quotations-- perhaps the first 2 are sufficient
2. the list of members, wwhich is large part reproduces the sections on membership and organization. Doing it one way or another is sufficient.
In addition, the full name is used too often-- most of the time it should be "the club" (lower case), and "Delphinian A.B" should just be A.B., when it's clear from previous content that he's a member. .
It's an extremely nice essay and I congratulate you for it. --the only problem is to make it look more like a Wikipedia  article,.  DGG ( talk ) 22:17, 7 September 2021 (UTC)

Thanks for the detail! I removed the block quotes after the first two, removed the prose text that duplicates information in the table, uncapitalized "club" where appropriate, and removed the extraneous references to members as Delphians. That should take care of all the issues you raised, so I'm going to remove the Template:Overly detailed. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:14, 8 September 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Delphian Club/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 22:46, 11 November 2021 (UTC)
Can review Eddie891  Talk Work  22:46, 11 November 2021 (UTC)

@Eddie891: Just checking in. Are you still working on this review? Dugan Murphy (talk) 23:16, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
Gah, has it already been ten days! How time flies. Yes, I will make sure to attend to this within the next few days, thanks for the reminder. Eddie891  Talk Work  23:31, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
And my sincere apologies for not being more on top of things. Eddie891  Talk Work  23:31, 21 November 2021 (UTC)
No problem. Happens to the best of us. Dugan Murphy (talk) 00:03, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
OK, sources all seem reliable, images are licensed OK. Seems relatively comprehensive, at least for GA purposes. Eddie891  Talk Work  01:16, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
Some thoughts on prose
Why is Neal the only member specifically highlighted in the lede?
My thinking is that Neal is the most famous of the club members, even though he is nevertheless fairly unknown today. Let me know if you have more thoughts on this. Dugan Murphy (talk) 16:34, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
What does "but no more than nine served at a time" 'served' mean in this context?
I reworded this use of "served" in the lede and in the body. Let me know if still think it's unclear. Dugan Murphy (talk) 16:34, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
"is supposed to be" what does 'supposed' mean in this context? Presumably the members didn't actually think that
Correct. Let me know if you think my rewording is still unclear. I'll look at the remaining comments in a bit. Dugan Murphy (talk) 16:34, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
Why use "hebdomadal" instead of just "weekly"?
I just added some extra wording to make that more clear. Let me know if it could still improve. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
" regular contributions from members" monetary or literary?
Literary. I changed the word to "submissions" to make that more clear. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
"Neal's reflected his reputation" maybe say what it was here as well?
Done. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
"hen the club flourished most" how so?
Reworded to say "most active and festive". Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
Do we know if any of the "prominent men" accepted the offer?
They didn't. Just added that. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
The character of Mr. Snap is a satire of John Neal and the story "Raising the Wind; or Diddling Considered as One of the Exact Sciences" is a satire of Neal's writing for the club and later in The Yankee. how is this relevant to the delpgian club?
Reworded. Let me know if the connection is still unclear. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
I'm not sure any of the examples besides Poe's could really be construed as mentions in popular culture since it's all members of the group-- maybe they would be better integrated into the 'history' section? Maybe not
I'm inclined to agree. I've integrated the non-Poe content from this section into the history section, which led to me reordering a few things in that section. I think this is an improvement. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
Perhaps some more to follow. Eddie891  Talk Work  01:27, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
Great. Thanks for the comments! I think this article is better as a result. Let me know if you have more. Dugan Murphy (talk) 18:02, 22 November 2021 (UTC)
OK, this would seem to meet the GA criteria now, passing. Eddie891  Talk Work  22:55, 24 November 2021 (UTC)