# Talk:Ivor McIntyre

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 05:31, 28 March 2016 (UTC)
I will review this one. Initial comments as follows:

No inappropriate dupe links (there is one in the lead but that's allowable).
Image tags checked and look OK.
All cites correlated to references.
Presentation of references appropriate.
Comments on text to follow. Zawed (talk) 05:31, 28 March 2016 (UTC)

Lead - is it really necessary to have the bracketed text regarding future ranks in the lead itself? Maybe move them into the main body of the article?
"...promoted to flight lieutenant effective from 31 March." Was this a back dated promotion or was it to be effective from 31 March 1925?
And that's it for me. Cheers. Zawed (talk) 08:05, 29 March 2016 (UTC)

Made changes, tks for reviewing! Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:56, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
Looks good, passing as GA. Zawed (talk) 01:02, 3 April 2016 (UTC)