# Talk:Christmas Time Is in the Air Again

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Reviewer: CurtisNaito (talk · contribs) 00:07, 26 August 2015 (UTC)

I will handle this review fairly soon.CurtisNaito (talk) 00:07, 26 August 2015 (UTC)

@Calvin999Here are some copyedits which I recommend.
"with Carey's singing"="with Carey singing"
"Embellished with bells and chimes"=I believe that this is technically a dangling modifier, because the instrumentalists are not the ones who are embellished.
"writing although the effect is"=A bit clunky. Maybe try "writing that, although the effect is...,"
"writer Pip Ellwood award"="awarded"
"completely undersigning"="undersinging"
"are intercut with Christmas-themed images are shown"=maybe you should delete "are shown"
"Credits adapted from the liner notes of"=Since this is a normal non-bulleted sentence ending with a period, I think it should be a full sentence reading "The above credits were adapted from"
"album/thirteenth studio album"=I don't think a backslash should be used in formal writing. Replace the backslash with the word "and".
There are a number of other issues.

"26 November 2012"=Most of the time, you put the day after the month. You should use one consistent format.
"described the orchestration of the original compositions "One Child" and "Christmas Time Is in the Air Again" as "gooey"."=Use a different quote from this review. I don't know what "gooey" means or what its significance is.
The link at the bottom of the page says "Lyric Video", but I can't see any lyrics.
I'm not sure if the "Release history" section should exist. We already know that it was released on December 2 2012, so do we really need a whole section just to say that it was released in the United Kingdom on the same date?
The "Charts" section can stay, but are you sure you can't add in one more country. It's unusual that the "Charts" section is actually just a "South Korean charts" section.CurtisNaito (talk) 16:53, 26 August 2015 (UTC)
No, because South Korea was the only country it charted in. It didn't chart on any Christmas/Holiday US charts unfortunately. I can't make up chart positions.  — Calvin999  17:11, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
I've done everything. Thanks so much.  — Calvin999  17:11, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
I think that you should mention somewhere in the article that the song was charted only in South Korea. Also, what is glutinous music? If you're going to use such strange words to describe music you should provide a link to the Wikipedia article explaining what glutinous music is or else use a different word. Maybe you should just put into the article some other impression that that reviewer had of the song. I am sure that most Wikipedia readers will not know what either "gooey" or "glutinous" music is without a dictionary definition of "gooey music".CurtisNaito (talk) 17:23, 27 August 2015 (UTC)

I don't need to mention that because you only include chart positions for charts where it did indeed chart. It's very common for songs/singles to only appear on one chart for a variety of reasons (lack of promo/no one likes it/no one knows about it etc.). We don't say "It didn't chart in... " because there's no source for it, because it never happened. By gooey he meant that it's a bit overwhelmingly and sickly Christmas-y, so I've replaced "gooey" with glutinous, meaning that it's overdosing on the Christmas aspect, which is what the critic means. I've changed it to "overwhelmingly Christmas-y".  — Calvin999
Okay, I will pass this.CurtisNaito (talk) 18:18, 27 August 2015 (UTC)
Thank you.  — Calvin999  18:26, 27 August 2015 (UTC)