# Talk:Mark Murphy (safety, born 1958)

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Reviewer: Ajpolino (talk · contribs) 21:14, 10 January 2024 (UTC)

Hi Gonzo fan2007, clicked here thinking I'd be learning about Packers CEO Mark Murphy, but I'm happy to be educated on someone else's life. Will get through this review asap. Ajpolino (talk) 21:14, 10 January 2024 (UTC)

This is an excellently written article that was a pleasure to read. The coverage of his football career is a bit jargon-rich and might be challenging for someone unfamiliar with American football to follow, but I think it's a perfectly fine match for the likely audience. Two brief comments below, but neither requires us to hold up the review. I'm happy to pass this. Thanks for the interesting read. Ajpolino (talk) 21:38, 10 January 2024 (UTC)
1. Well-written:

In his last year of college, GlenOak won the 1979 WVIAC championship - I assume this is a typo and it's supposed to be West Liberty winning the WVIAC?
2. Verifiable with no original research:

All material is cited to sources that seem reliable.
His hobbies include playing racquetball and he has an interest in hand guns - it seems like we're on somewhat shaky ground saying what a 65-year-old man's hobbies are based on an interview he gave when he was 23. I'm not insisting we cut this, but I'm flagging my discomfort for you to consider.
3. Broad in its coverage

It's a satisfying read. I read some articles on Murphy based on what Google would serve up and didn't find any major details that you've omitted.
4/5. Neutral/Stable - Pass.
6. Illustrated - No images

Thanks Ajpolino! I've made some edits to address your comments above. Not sure if you saw the article's DYK, but if you haven't, take a look on the talk page. I took Mark Murphy (American football executive) and Mark Murphy (safety, born 1958) to DYK with the same hook hahar. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  22:20, 10 January 2024 (UTC)