# Talk:Cadet scandal

To the primary author of this article, @Rumba Samba Mambo: I highly recommend giving this article some tune-ups and then nominating it at WP:GA. Nice work! theleekycauldron (talk • contribs) (they/them) 21:07, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

Thank you very much! It will definitely be in my plans 💝 --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 22:39, 23 July 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Cadet scandal/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:40, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

I will be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 16:40, 16 October 2021 (UTC)


### Lede
Swap em dashes for commas around "also known as the Ballvé Case (Spanish: Caso Ballvé)"
Done
"whose content" → "the contents of which"
Done


### Background
#### Political and military context
in the context of the Second World War, in which the country maintained its neutrality. fragment
Done
"and the party system"
Done
"Thanks to the coup" → "Under Uriburu's coup"
Done
"was declared the winner"
Done
"spin-off" → "offshoot"
Done


#### Gay culture in Buenos Aires
Delink "turn of the century" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done
"name by which they were also referred to." → "a name which also came to describe its speakers."
Done
Delink "effeminate" and "amoral" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done
Comma after "sought to modernize the country"
Done
Delink "cliché" and "aristocrat" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done


### Ballvé Piñero's parties
"eighteen years younger" → "18 years his junior"
Done
Delink "vice" and "(substance) abuse" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done
"name which alluded to the" → "named for the"
Done
Swap colon for comma after "in his own words"
Done
"In medical experts" → "To medical experts"
Done


### Investigation and arrest
"him seduce other cadets" → "as he seduced other cadets"
Done
Delink "birthday party", "discharge", and "lawsuit" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done
"one hundred and twenty-one" → "121" per MOS:NUM
Done


### Impact
#### Society and politics
"the public rumor ahd begun to spread around the general public"
Done
"about who the men involved were" → "the identities of the men involved"
Done
"a big street fighting occurred" → "a large street fight" without the WL
Done
"a number that parodied" → "a number parodying"
Done
comma for em dash after "June 4, 1943,"
Done


#### Ensuing gay persecution
"Goodwin was apprehend the same day as his friend," → "Goodwin was apprehended the same day as his friend"
Done
"the age of majority until July—which was 22 years old at the time—" ((right arrow)) "the age of majority (which, at the time, was 22 years old) until July"
Done
Delink "bestseller" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done
"but rather "being" homosexual, becoming a cause of discharge from the army." → "but rather simply "being" homosexual was now a cause for discharge."
Done


### Legacy
"that the scandal opened "ajar the door...""
Done
"he got access" → "he received access"
Done
"more than two hundred" → "more than 200" per MOS:NUM
Done


### References
Good


### General comments
All pictures used are public domain and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Copyvio score looks good at 5.7%
Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions. — GhostRiver 19:18, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver, thank you for taking a look. I've made the corrections. Let me know if everything's ok! --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 18:31, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
Looks great now, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 18:36, 17 October 2021 (UTC)
Thank you! --ℜ𝔲𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔖𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔞 𝔐𝔞𝔪𝔟𝔬 🌠 (talk) 18:47, 17 October 2021 (UTC)