# Talk:Olga Sapphire

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Reviewer: Encyclopædius (talk · contribs) 20:46, 4 June 2020 (UTC)
Will review within a few days! † Encyclopædius 18:16, 6 June 2020 (UTC)

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Is it worth mentioning the name of the Japanese diplomat?
 Done SusunW (talk) 17:19, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
by the Nihon Gekijō variety theater. In Tokyo?
 Done SusunW (talk) 17:19, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
"She retired from the stage in 1953, but continued to be influential in ballet until 1957. In her later years, Sapphire wrote three books about ballet, which remain influential in Japan. " - contradiction, either she is still influential or she stopped in 1957.
Changed the first sentence to read "but continued to be involved in ballet production until 1957".  Done SusunW (talk) 17:19, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
Early life
"He" - Her father?
 Done SusunW (talk) 17:28, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
"She was born during a period of turbulence, as the 1905 Russian Revolution had begun two years beforehand. World War I would follow when she was seven years old, and the 1917 Russian Revolution began when she was 10.[2][3] She later wrote that her childhood was at a time of cold and hunger.[3]" rep x 4 of "she"
 Done SusunW (talk) 17:28, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
In Russia
"The couple began planning for a move to Japan and Pavlova gathered dance-related books, music, and costumes. She spoke with the Japanese ambassador, who set up a meeting in Moscow with the industrialist Ichizō Kobayashi, who had opened a theater in Tokyo to run films for audiences of up to 3,000 spectators, which would be suitable to stage a ballet." - the whos and which read awkwardly, rewowrd it!
Reworded.  Done SusunW (talk) 17:28, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
Looks OK SusunW, always amazes me how many red links articles like this turn up when you expand them!† Encyclopædius 16:34, 8 June 2020 (UTC)

I know. It was really hard to write with most sources in Japanese and Russian and trying to find links to the various people and things. Fortunately GRuban and Omotecho provided invaluable help in that area. I think an entire section of articles could be developed on Japanese dance and dancers if anyone were so inclined. Thanks for the review Doc. I always appreciate your input. SusunW (talk) 17:28, 8 June 2020 (UTC)
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Shows just how important translation is!!† Encyclopædius 19:46, 8 June 2020 (UTC)