# Talk:Onsen Nozokimi Daisakusen

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Nominator: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 20:43, 8 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Pokelego999 (talk · contribs) 22:00, 8 May 2024 (UTC)

I'll take this one on as soon as I can. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 22:00, 8 May 2024 (UTC)
@Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs)


### Six GA Criteria
1. Article is well-written.
2. No OR, all info is cited in the article.
3. Coverage is broad in depth and focus. Shows multiple aspects of the game.
4. Article appears neutral, and does not appear to hold a significantly negative nor positive stance on the subject.
5. Article appears stable. Does not appear to have had any major vandalism occur.
6. Article uses two fair use images with proper rationale.


### Lead
-Looks good


### Gameplay
-Looks good


### Development and Release
-Looks good


### Reception
-"as loved by the masses," I'd reword this a bit.

Fair, it's both a bit much and overlaps the stuff about its popularity.--AlexandraIDV 06:13, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
-I feel the "since the original Revelations: Persona," can be cut.

Changed to found the game shocking as a long-time fan of Persona--AlexandraIDV 06:13, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
-"In the end, Ikeya still found the game fun and exciting, and enjoyed the ending." I'd reword since this seems to be a separate review from the sentence it's connected to just prior. 

You're right, there are two separate NLab sources by different writers. I've moved this bit up so it comes right after the earlier Ikeya bit.--AlexandraIDV 06:13, 9 May 2024 (UTC)


### Overall
This is the most bizarre thing, and I was not expecting this when taking on this review. In any case, article itself mostly looks fine, just patch the above and this should be good to go. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 22:50, 8 May 2024 (UTC)

@Pokelego999: Thank you for the review! Yeah, it's wild that this kind of thing even exists, but I guess 2008 was a different time. I've done my best to adress the issues you brought up in this edit - let me know how you feel about it, and if there's any further changes you'd like to see.--AlexandraIDV 06:13, 9 May 2024 (UTC)
Looks good. Happy to pass. Has one ever considered Magneton? Pokelego999 (talk) 20:48, 10 May 2024 (UTC)