# Talk:Ducks Ahoy!

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Nominator: Guyinblack25 (talk · contribs) 04:25, 10 May 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 12:17, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

Looks nice and short. Will leave comments in an hour or so. ♦ JAGUAR  12:17, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

Lead
"The player maneuvers a boat" - the article's gameplay section describes it as a gondola rather than a generic boat
"The title's documentation included a song, jokes, and activities related to the gameplay" - wrong tense; assuming all copies of the game still exist and is not removed from the space-time continuum, it includes those activities
The lead is a little on the short side and should be expanded slightly to summarise the article more effectively
Body
"and a town hall, as well as a piazza" - link piazza
"...to capsize the player's boat if it gets under gondola" - are these two separate things? Otherwise, if it gets underneath it. Also, the lead described the hippo as a 'he' - you can use either
I see repetition of the game's title in the reception section. Use alternatives such as "the game" or "it" when appropriate to improve prose flow
"Ute Elisabeth Van Nuys called Ducks Ahoy! "delightful"" - 'delightful' was not quoted in the previous sentence
This article is generally well written, and certainly comprehensive for a game of its age. I'll leave it  on hold until the minor comments are addressed.  ♦ JAGUAR  12:29, 21 June 2025 (UTC)

Thank you for the feedback. I believe I addressed all but one of your concerns.
For Fred D'Ignazio's review, he stated "This game is a delight." and "the game has charm.", so I didn't put those in quotes because I changed the form of those two words. The only word I pulled directly was "humorous", which I can put in quotes.
Please let me know whether edits are needed for D'Ignazio's wording or if you notice anything else the article. (Guyinblack25 talk 17:13, 21 June 2025 (UTC))
Thanks for addressing them - the reviewer's wording should be fine. Let's get this promoted.  Jaguar (talk) 18:14, 21 June 2025 (UTC)