# Talk:Hugh of Fauquembergues

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 15:18, 20 February 2018 (UTC)
Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:18, 20 February 2018 (UTC)


### Criteria
No DAB links Y
No Dead links Y
Images appropriately licensed Y


### Prose Suggestions
#### Lede
 Baldwin I of Jerusalem granted him Galilee after its first prince, Tancred, who was Baldwin's opponent, suggest  Baldwin I of Jerusalem granted him Galilee after its first prince, Tancred, who was a rival of Baldwin,
against Toghtekin, Atabeg of Damascus. suggest against Toghtekin, the Atabeg of Damascus.


#### Early life
but their conflict was soon resolved. suggest but their conflict was soon made unnecesary.


#### Prince of Galilee
However, the battle was not lost, because the king made a surprise attack against the Egyptians and defeated them. suggest However, they were not beaten, because the king made a surprise attack against the Egyptians and defeated them.
That is all of my suggestions, passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:34, 21 February 2018 (UTC)
@Iazyges:, thank you for your review and assessment. Sorry, I do not understand your above remarks. Do you suggest that the article should be modified? Borsoka (talk) 04:39, 22 February 2018 (UTC)
@Borsoka: No problem. I am suggesting the text that comes first be changed into the text after "suggest". Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 05:47, 22 February 2018 (UTC)
Bad booy  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 203.192.232.224 (talk) 17:25, 26 March 2018 (UTC)