# Talk:Moritz Wagner (basketball)

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
Going to review MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 10 May 2018 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Youth career
Wikilink Regionalliga to List of Regionalligen#Basketball
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:54, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
"scoring six points in 6:15 minutes of play " - 6 minutes and 15 seconds
Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 20:56, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
"However, Wagner mostly saw action on the club’s second team and on the under-19 Bundesliga squad that season." - this sentence is uncited and needs a reliable source to verify it
Removed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:08, 10 May 2018 (UTC)


### College career
"The hysteria of March Madness and college basketball got him hooked." - this should be slightly rewritten as "hooked" is unencyclopedic
Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:10, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
"after watching video of Wagner,"  - a video
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 21:14, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
"Beilein called former Alba Berlin player Johannes Herber, who had played under Beilein for four years at West Virginia University." - perhaps have Herber's playing position instead of player to avoid reptition of similarly spelt words
edited another way.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:30, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
West Virginia University should have its acroynms in parentheses on the first time it is mentioned
Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:31, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
"in which he tried to sell them on the merits of U.S. college basketball over a European professional contract." - in which he tried to convince them the advantages of American college basketball over a European professional contract.
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:36, 10 May 2018 (UTC)


### Freshman season
"After blocking 2 shots all season, Wagner posted 4 blocks and had a season-high 8 rebounds" - the numbers in this text need to be spelt out
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:43, 10 May 2018 (UTC)


### Sophomore season
Wikilink Academic All-American
Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:47, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
"Wagner's 5 steals" - five
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:49, 10 May 2018 (UTC)
"while shooting 39.5% on 3-pointers."  - three-pointers
Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 22:56, 10 May 2018 (UTC)


### Junior season
The second paragraph is a little long. Consider splitting it into two after the mention of Wagner becoming an Academic All-Big Ten honoree.
Split into three.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 00:56, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
"Wagner's 21 points and 10 rebounds complemented Charles Matthews 17 points and 12 assists" - Matthews'
Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:02, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
"Michigan defeat Texas 59–52 on December 12 but Wagner injured his ankle with 7:36 remaining." - Michigan defeated Texas 59–52 on December 12 but Wagner injured his ankle with 7 minutes and 32 seconds remaining.
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:05, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
"On January 13, 2018 Wagner scored" - a comma is needed between "2018" and "Wagner"
Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:06, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
"including 3/4 from three-point range" - a three-point range
Apparently there was a syntax issue causing confusion. I have changed 3/4 to 3-for-4 and similar elsewhere.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:14, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
Link East Lansing to East Lansing, Michigan
O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:22, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
Wikilink Most Valuable Player, Coaches Poll and AP Poll
linked.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:25, 11 May 2018 (UTC)


### International career
"Averaging 16.1 points 'a contest" - per
Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:26, 11 May 2018 (UTC)


### References
Be consistent in what date format you use throughout the referencing
Reformatted.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:40, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
References 10, 33, 48 are missing the author and publication date
Dated.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:47, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
Author for 10 and 33.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:51, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
References 36, 37 does not have the date it was published
Dated.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 01:55, 11 May 2018 (UTC)
References 40, 42, 44, 46, 51, 54 do not have the author of their respective articles
Will put this review on hold for the time being. MWright96 (talk) 18:20, 10 May 2018 (UTC)

Could we edit the first line to show that his nickname is "Moe", per this Defector article (https://defector.com/its-moe-wagner-not-mo-wagner) and the player's Twitter page (https://x.com/moritz_weasley)? 69.21.84.93 (talk) 21:13, 4 December 2024 (UTC)