# Talk:Kenneth Bainbridge

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 19:05, 17 February 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Hawkeye7 (talk)
Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly.  --Seabuckthorn ♥ 19:05, 17 February 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors: 
b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:  

2: Verifiable with no original research

a. Has an appropriate reference section:  Yes
b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:  excellent (Thorough check on Google.)

c. No original research:   Done

3: Broad in its coverage

4: Neutral

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc:  Yes
6: Images  Done (PD)

I'm glad to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article: 

I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview and to give relative emphasis.
"Bainbridge called the Trinity explosion a "foul and awesome display" and remarked to J. Robert Oppenheimer immediately after the test, "Now we are all sons of bitches."[2]" (Can you break it into simpler sentences to make it easy to follow?)
split into two sentences. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
"After the explosion of the first atomic bomb went off without such drama, in what he later described as ""a foul and awesome display",[2] he turned to Oppenheimer and said, "now we are all sons of bitches."" (Can you break it into simpler sentences to make it easy to follow?)
split into two sentences. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
"remarked to J. Robert Oppenheimer immediately after the test, "Now we are all sons of bitches."[2]" ("Now" or "now"?)
It should be capitalised, per the original source. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
"When his Guggenheim fellowship expired in September 1934, he return to the United States, where he accepted an associate professorship at Harvard University."
Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
"There was little interest in their work only because research was being carried out elsewhere.[18]"
Deleted. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
"He initially led E-2, the instrumentation group, which developed x-ray instrumentation for examining explosions." (I think it should be "X-ray")
Yes. Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
"The had a son, Martin Keeler, and two daughters, Joan and Margaret Tomkins."
Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Hawkeye7, please feel free to strike out any recommendation you think will not help in improving the article. All the best,  --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:12, 20 February 2014 (UTC)

All points addressed. Thanks for your review. Hawkeye7 (talk) 08:34, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
Thanks, Hawkeye7, very much for your diligence, care and precision in writing such great articles.  --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:00, 21 February 2014 (UTC)
Promoting the article to GA status.  --Seabuckthorn ♥ 23:00, 21 February 2014 (UTC)

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