# Talk:Dorchester Heights Monument

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 10:30, 9 June 2021 (UTC)
I will review, comments to follow over next few days. Zawed (talk) 10:30, 9 June 2021 (UTC)
Lead

 architectural firm of Peabody and Stearns It looks like, although the article is titled Peabody and Stearns, the name is actually Peabody & Stearns.
Changed the "and" to an ampersand.
Background

During the outbreak of the American Revolutionary War, American troops attempted a months-long siege During doesn't quite fit. Suggest "On the outbreak of the American Revolutionary War, American troops commenced a lengthy siege of Boston"
Changed.
assembled a redoubt you may have phrased it this way to avoid hewing too close to the source, but I think built would be a better term. A redoubt is a fort-type structure so assembled is an unusual way of phrasing it.
Changed "assembled" to "constructed"
Peabody and Stearns ditto my comment from the lead. The same usage is also in the infobox.
Changed both occurences.
Dedication

There are a few individuals, Warren, Rice and Lodge, mentioned but without context.
Added context on these individuals.
Design

four-sided shaft rising 60 feet it may be just be me, but I think of a shaft as being sunk into the ground, e.g. a mine. Perhaps column?
Changed.
the phrase "this shaft" is repeatedly used in successive sentences.
Changed.
Suggest adding mention of the other ACW monuments here, then you won't need the cite that is in the lead.
Moved.
Other stuff

The "See also" seems too broad a subject. Is there an article listing ACW monuments in Boston or Massachusetts, that would be more relevant.
Unfortunately not that I know of, but I'll go ahead and removed the 1902 in art page.
No dupe links
Image tags check out, although I still suspect some sort of PD tag should be present to cover the subject of the photo.
That's it for me. Zawed (talk) 10:51, 11 June 2021 (UTC)

JJonahJackalope, just a ping as I'm not sure if you have seen this. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:33, 14 June 2021 (UTC)
Zawed, thanks for starting this review. I went ahead and made changes to address your comments here and think it should be good to go. If there are any further issues or changes I should make, please let me know. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 15:53, 15 June 2021 (UTC)
Your changes are fine. I am passing this as GA as I consider it to meet the appropriate criteria. Great work! Zawed (talk) 09:15, 16 June 2021 (UTC)