# Talk:Crotona Park

@LeoFrank: There's no reason for this article and the Crotona Play Center not to be merged. Since the play center is an important part of the park, but does not yet warrant its own article, I have merged the two stubs. It seems to me that the swimming pool is the only notable aspect of the park, besides the green space itself. 
On a related note, my editing is not "disruptive" as described here; it was your overzealous anti-vandalism edit that started all this. 50.14.142.33 (talk) 13:39, 30 June 2014 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Crotona Park/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:10, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

"127.5 acres (0.516 km2;" I think converting to hectares (as you do below) rather than km2 is more appropriate.
Done.
"to the Bathgate family" any chance of a few words of context since the family isn't linked?
Done.
Could link "parkway".
Done.
Could also link Manhattan.
Done.
"system.[5][6][8][9]' are four cites really needed for this one short sentence?
Removed the last one. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
Is the ancient Greek city the same as Crotone?
Oh yeah, good catch. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
" in 1903.[18]:10[12]" order.
"was built as well" no need for "as well".
Fixed.
"the athletic field and bandstand were too loud" presumably you mean "activities taking place at" those locations were too loud...?
Fixed.
"1964 promotional photograph of the pool at Crotona Park" avoid starting sentence with a number.
Fixed.
"WPA renovation" I wouldn't use the abbreviation in the section heading before you've explained what it is in the prose...
Fixed.
"Deal.[32][31]:456 " order.
Done.
"Moses planned to create 23 pools.[33] Moses, along..." ->" He, along..."
Fixed.
"The pools were to contain..." I think "have" rather than contain, as the first thing is length and "contain" reads odd to me.
Done.
"By mid-1935" "By mid-1936", it's just unfortunate formatting on my screen I guess, by they are "visually" repetitive if that makes sense?
Fixed.
"at a pace of " I would prefer "rate"?
Done.
"$2.87 million" inflate?
Done.
"a previous wooden boathouse that " one, rather than repeat boathouse?
Went with something else. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
"Work had begun by early 1983, and the complex was closed for two summer seasons while work was " work repeated.
Done.
"benches, repaving of paths" and repaving...
Done.
" federal funding was provided by the federal" feds x 2.
Fixed.
"came to the park, while Pope John Paul II said mass at the park" the park x 2.  And when you say "came to the park", do you mean they just visited or anything else?
Fixed - yes, they just visited to take a tour of the facilities. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
"a serial rapist" strictly this isn't a crime, this is a crimial.
I realize now. I've fixed the sentence. epicgenius (talk)
" communities.[18]:11, 13[65][50] " order.
Fixed.
Morrisania is overlinked.
Strange, Claremont shouldn't link to Morrisania. Fixed. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
" park's eastern section.[73]" period yet "the park's northeast section[73]" no period.  I think these are mainly fragments so they shouldn't have periods.
Fixed.
Tremont and Bronx Borough Hall are overlinked.
Fixed.
"spray showers" don't all showers spray?
Yeah, but this is the official NYC Parks classification. I have changed it to "showers". epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
"An early photo of the lake" photograph, and specify this is Indian Lake.
Done.
"Works Progress Administration" overlinked.
Done.
"and Modern Classical e" really no appropriate article for this?
Found another link. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
"9.32 acres (3.77 ha)" only in the infobox and unreferenced.
Fixed.
"1934-1936" en-dash.
Magoon only mentioned in the infobox and not the prose.
Fixed.
Significant dates only in infobox, not referenced and not in prose.
The significant dates are referenced in the "Landmark designations" section. I have moved these up now. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
"Crotona Park, Bronx". 1922–1925" either remove the period or put one after teh date range.
Fixed.
Ref 47, double hyphen should be en-dash.
Removed, as that part of the title is not necessary. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
"New York City Landmarks Preservation Commission" overlinked.
Done.
That's all I have on this one.  Nice read.  The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 13:06, 7 April 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review. I have now addressed all of your comments. epicgenius (talk) 17:21, 7 April 2020 (UTC)
As usual, top quality stuff.  Promoting.  The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 18:56, 7 April 2020 (UTC)