# Talk:Florianus

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 13:00, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

A couple of points:

I have copy edited. Could you check and flag up anything you are not happy with.
Probus appears rather suddenly, with no explanation as to who or what he was. Could you insert a sentence briefly giving his background to that point?
 Done
Tacticus. In the lead he is "allegedly assassinated", in the article he "died... allegedly as a consequence of a military plot". How about 'allegedly assassinated as a consequence of a military plot'?
 Done
Optional prose points for your consideration:

"allowing him to utilize guerrilla warfare to wage a war of attrition rather than a straightforward war." Consider 'a straightforward confrontation.' to avoid two "war"s in close proximity.
 Done
"Probus launched skirmishes around the city". I am not sure if, grammatically, one can launch a skirmish. Consider 'raids'.
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"In total, Florianus' reign lasted only slightly more than 88 days." reads clumsily to me. Perhaps 'lasted less than three months'; or 'less than ninety days'?
 Done
"However, Florianus soon had to deal with the revolt of Probus, who rose up soon after Florianus ascended" Two "soon"s in close proximity.
 Done
Gog the Mild (talk) 16:29, 23 July 2018 (UTC)

@Gog the Mild: Believe I have fixed all points. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 20:51, 23 July 2018 (UTC)
Fine work there. A good tight little article. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:58, 23 July 2018 (UTC)