# Talk:Edouard Izac

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 12:57, 18 March 2019 (UTC)
Hi, I'll be taking this on. Please ping me when responding on this page, so it doesn't get lost in my ~3,500 page watchlist... Eddie891  Talk Work  12:57, 18 March 2019 (UTC)

Sounds good! @Eddie891: I figure I'll get to it once you finish the review. Is this the case? Thanks! —Ed!(talk) 03:03, 29 March 2019 (UTC)
Ed!, Done! Eddie891  Talk Work  16:24, 30 March 2019 (UTC)
Ed!: any update on responding to my prose comments? If you don't agree with them, just say that, and I will happily pass Eddie891  Talk Work  23:19, 22 May 2019 (UTC)
Ahh! My apologies! Kinda fell through the cracks. I'll get to this in the next few days or the weekend. —Ed!(talk) 18:28, 23 May 2019 (UTC)
@Eddie891: Thank you for the patience! I've responded to everything below now. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
Ed!, Thanks! sorry for dragging this on so long. happy to approve! Great work! Eddie891  Talk Work  02:02, 2 June 2019 (UTC)


### Sources
AGF on offline sources, if you intend to take it further, reviewers may request scans of the pages.
If you inline cite the United States Congress Biographical Dictionary, that's fine, but then it shouldn't be listed in the "references" section
Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 20:33, 7 April 2019 (UTC)
Ref #34c does not cite 'An accident following the death of his wife in 1970 led him to live with his second daughter, Anna"
That detail is cited to ref 35. —Ed!(talk) 20:33, 7 April 2019 (UTC)
Ref #39 could use a page number, and I'm not seeing anything about redistricting
Source states the name of the district he's elected to. —Ed!(talk) 20:33, 7 April 2019 (UTC)
Ref #40 could use a page number, but the claim is adequately sourced
Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 20:33, 7 April 2019 (UTC)
Ref #44a does not cite the 1960s claim, at least on ProQuest saying "In later years, he raised beef cattle and lived in Bethesda, Md."
That detail is cited to ref 42. —Ed!(talk) 20:33, 7 April 2019 (UTC)


### Prose
experiences touring concentration camps changed some of his views this could hardly be more vague. Clarify?
Done, though body of article elaborates on it better than Lead could. —Ed!(talk) 03:18, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
standardize year formats (be consistent between mdy or dmy)
OK. I think I've got it standard at mdy. —Ed!(talk) 03:18, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
Interested in learning from a young age perhaps remove.
Done. —Ed!(talk) 03:18, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
recommendation from a Congressman in Chicago who was the congressman?
I haven't found a source that states a specific name. —Ed!(talk) 03:18, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
clarify what war he's fighting in in the article body
Done. —Ed!(talk) 03:18, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
he signed up for the Naval Transport Service a date would be useful here for context
Sources don't have anything that I can find on specifics. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
Abraham Lincoln rolled starboard is this referring to the President Lincoln, or a different ship.
Yep. Made consistent. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
especially for the Russian prisoners of war why is this necessary?
Gives the context that the POW situation in that camp, especially as he watched treatment of others, motivated him to continue to attempt to escape. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
d to a plum post as the instead of 'plum', use a more NPOV and accessible description.
Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
hese retellings gained an audience and he was noted for his animation. is this necessary?
As I can tell, it's one of few hints in the sources that give some context of his personality and how he presented himself while campaigning, which is missing amid his biographical activities and interests. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
Running again in 1936, Izac changed his strategy and used his war record and Medal of Honor award as selling points in his political campaign. He retold the story of his capture in rallies at auditoriums, schools and in the streets. These retellings gained an audience and he was noted for his animation. perhaps rephrase as "Campaigning again in 1936, Izac changed his strategy and used his war record and Medal of Honor award as selling points in his political campaign. He retold the story of his capture in various rallies, becoming noted for his animation while speaking."
Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
the New York Times. only the times?
The Times is the only one the sources note as having given significant coverage. —Ed!(talk) 15:44, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
here are the copyedits I made. Feelfree to revert any or all. Eddie891  Talk Work  16:24, 30 March 2019 (UTC)


### General
Is http://www.homeofheroes.com/photos/6_ww1/izac.html supposed to redirect to a log in page? If yes, I'd say there's no point in including the link


#### A drive by comment
It may be helpful to give his term as a representative in the lead. (Just a thought.) A nice article, IMHO. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:16, 11 May 2019 (UTC)

Feels like it would be inconsistent to do so without also doing so for the Navy service, based on current sentence structure. Adding both would make it start to run on. —Ed!(talk) 03:50, 14 May 2019 (UTC)

The lead of this article is too long, especially given the length and depth of the article itself. Per WP:LEAD I have shortened it. Go4thProsper (talk) 23:00, 6 March 2025 (UTC)