# Talk:Kathy Arendsen

Is there a source for the statement about Arendsen's college graduation? Jeff in CA (talk) 20:42, 21 September 2020 (UTC)

Jeff in CA, added this. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 23:58, 21 September 2020 (UTC)
Thanks. Jeff in CA (talk) 07:14, 22 September 2020 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Kathy Arendsen/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 20:37, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful. 
If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)
I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy. 
Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 
Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.


### Immediate Failures
It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -


### Links
### Prose
#### Lede
Much the same as the other article I reviewed, probably needs combining into say two paragraphs (could be one big one). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
Lede needs an expansion, something like "Sports Illustrated as one of the 50 greatest sports figures from Michigan" should be in the lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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former player - former professional player? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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helped pitch Holland Christian High School to the state championship - doesn't make much sense without explaination. something like: "pitched (link) for the Holland Christian High School, where they won the state championship." Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Upon concluding her collegiate career, Arendsen played professional softball with the Raybestos Brakettes for 15 years, earning All-American honors 13 times and winning nine national championships and three world championships. - split into two sentences. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Is there no links for the national or world championship articles? At the very least the world championships will be notable. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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softball in three consecutive years. - for three consecutive years. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Link struck out (strikeout). Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Perhaps reword that whole sentence, start "In an Exhibition game, during the....". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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winningest coach in program history. - very American terminology. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
This actually needs explaining that she only did this at Oregon. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:36, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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#### General
I've made a change that would be hard to explain. Hope you don't mind. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
at the urging - weird word choice. Maybe "behest"? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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She originally played first base and the outfield in an adult league only under duress - links for first base and outfield. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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By grade seven - by seventh grade... Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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link basketball.Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Repetition of spending one year at Uni. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Link "no-hitters", or explain. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Link strikeout Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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The bit about her gold at the Pan American games should be in the lede. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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CSUC is used exactly once, perhaps just say "After graduating". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Raybestos Brakettes is linked, but it is mentioned earlier in the article. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Pan Am Games - say the full title, or use an acronym. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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link shutout. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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link "foul-tipping". Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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curve, rise, drop and change up - any of these linkable? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Any more info on the world championships? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
one strikeout record tie - tied the record for strikeouts. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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ASA is denoted, but never used. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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338-26 - Endash. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Who are the Ducks? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
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Link playoff? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 18:49, 14 October 2020 (UTC)
Linked to NCAA Division I Softball Tournament


### GA Review
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Review meta comments
I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 20:37, 11 October 2020 (UTC)
Still a few things outstanding HickoryOughtShirt?4, whenever you get chance. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:10, 19 October 2020 (UTC)
Lee Vilenski, done. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 16:18, 19 October 2020 (UTC)