# Talk:HMS Gloucester (1909)

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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 05:28, 30 August 2016 (UTC)

I propose to review this article. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:28, 30 August 2016 (UTC)


### First reading
In general, this is a well-written article about a ship which took part in quite a limited range of actions.
In general, it does not make clear who was in command of the vessel.
My sources usually don't tell me who was in command.
Where does the information in the info box come from?
It's all sourced in the description section.
You could mention the compliment of crew in the main body of text.
Doh!, done.
"The Bristol sub-class[Note 1] was rated as second-class cruisers" - were rather than was.
BritEng handling of collective nouns always throws me.
"This armament was considered rather too light for ships of this size" - by whom?
Added.
"As the protective deck was at the waterline, the ships were given a large metacentric height so that they would remain stable in the event of flooding above the armoured deck." - this sentence mixes singular and plural.
Yes, that's deliberate. The design elements are singular while reference to the ships keeps things from getting monotonous.
The last sentence in the "Design and description" section needs extra punctuation.
See if it reads better now.
"As tensions role with Germany in the first few days of August 1914" - Typo.
"Therefore, Milne stationed the battlecruiser Inflexible and Indefatigable ..." - This sentence is too long and convoluted.
Indeed, see how it reads now.
You do not mention who was in command of Gloucester in 1914.
Umm, Kelly is mentioned in command during the pursuit of Goeben, which is August 1914.
"... landing 100 Royal Marines." - Do you mean that Gloucester went to Galway in order to land the marines?
It seems so, although I don't have detailed enough info to specifically state that.
You mention Beatty at the Battle of Jutland, but you do not state who he was.
Good catch.
That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:00, 31 August 2016 (UTC)
Thanks for reviewing this.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:00, 31 August 2016 (UTC)
I am happy with the changes made and think this article meets the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:44, 31 August 2016 (UTC)