# Talk:Frame & Canvas

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 14:29, 13 October 2020 (UTC)

I will be sure to keep watch on this next time, so I am aware when you have responded --K. Peake 14:29, 13 October 2020 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Remove flatlist since it should only be bullet points in the infobox
Remove wikilink on studio album
Do not need "independent label" introduction for the lead
"After the release of" → "After the release of the band's second studio album,"
"as he was unable" → "due to him being unable"
"Recording took place" → "Recording sessions took place"
"December 1997 with J. Robbins helping to produce" → "December 1997, with J. Robbins helping with production during"
"Frame & Canvas is an" → "The album is an"
"album with lyrics co-written" → "release, for which the lyrics were co-written"
"or solely from Nanna." → "or solely wrote by Nanna."
"promoted with tours across the US," → "promoted by Braid with tours across the United States,"
"Discount and Burning Airlines." → "Discount, and Burning Airlines."
"Frame & Canvas received..." remove this sentence since there are not enough reviews to back it up
"It would go on to sell over" → "It had sold over"
"Frame & Canvas has appeared on best-of album lists" → "The album has appeared on best-of lists"
"in publications such as" → "by multiple publications, such as"
"NME and Rolling Stone." → "NME, and Rolling Stone."
Add a final sentence saying something like "The band performed it in full during a tour across the US in 2012." since this belongs away from the other tours due to being a lot later


### Background and production
"Following the release of" → "Following the release of their second studio album"
Remove wikilink on Braid since they are the lead artists
"played shows around" → "played shows in"
"Wisconsin and Missouri" → "Wisconsin, and Missouri"
"in February," → "in February 1997,"
"left from the band in March." → "left Braid the following month."
"Atkinson was a fan" → "Atkinson had been a fan"
"Touring continued throughout the year;" → "Braid's touring continued throughout 1997;"
"Tomorrow and Compound Red," → "Tomorrow, and Compound Red,"
"dropped out as the band was" → "dropped out as they were"
""First Day Back" and "Hugs from Boys"" → "The tracks "First Day Back" and "Hugs from Boys""
"the band traveled across the United States with" → "Braid traveled across the US with"
"in October." → "in October of that year."
"on a 7" vinyl record through" → "on a 7" vinyl, through" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
"and co-founder Darcie Knight" → "and fellow co-founder Darcie Knight"
"the band traveled to" → "Braid traveled to"
"in Arlington, Virginia," → "in Arlington County, Virginia," with the wikilink
"The band had met" → "Braid had met"
"work on Frame & Canvas." → "working on the album with him."
"served as the engineer" → "served as the engineer for Frame & Canvas"
Target mixed to Audio mixing (recorded music)


### Composition and lyrics
"acts such as" → "acts, such as"
"Jawbox (of which Robbins was a member)." → "Jawbox, the latter of which Robbins was a member of."
"the rest with Broach." → "the other five with Broach."
"up with the title" → "up with the title of"
"said it referred to" → "said the title referred to"
"compared to previous releases; he explained it" → "than the band's previous releases; he explained this"
"It features Broach" → "The song features Broach"
"included references to being an" → "includes references to Braid being an"
Wikilink airplay
"and settling in after" → "and is about settling in after"
"talks about a breakdown" → "talks about breakdowns"
""this cool beat ... immediately once he started playing. 'This is different'."" → ""this cool beat". Nanna stated that "immediately once he started playing", he thought: "This is different.""
Wikilink Urbana, Illinois
Target Champaign to Champaign, Illinois
"street lights in the town" → "street lights in Urbana"
"was written with" → "was written along with"
"they were making in the basement was happening upstairs." → "Braid were making in the basement was being made upstairs."
"According to him," → "According to Broach,"
"himself on tour he would compose" → "himself on tour, he would write"


### Release and tours
Retitle to Release and promotion
"and March 1998," → "and March of 1998,"
"on April 7 through" → "on April 7 of that year, through"
"with a stint across the United State" → "by performing across the US"
"until early May." → "until early May 1998."
"The band immediately went" → "Braid immediately went"
"throughout May, and various acts in June." → "throughout that month, while they were accompanied various acts in June 1998."
"In August, they played" → "In August of that year, the band played"
"October and early November." → "October and early November of 1998."
"of November and December, the band" → "of November and the following month, Braid"
"After a handful of" → "After a number of"
"went on a west coast tour" → "embarked on a west coast tour"
"throughout April with" → "throughout the following month with"
"with Eversor in May." → "with Eversor in May 1999."
"In June, the band announced" → "In June of that year, Braid announced"
"playing a friend's wedding," → "performing at a friend's wedding,"
"shows in August," → "shows in August 1999,"
"a hometown performance[2]" → "a hometown performance,[2]"
"as the Lucky to Be Alive (2000) live album." → "as their live album Lucky to Be Alive (2000)."
"from the band's last five days" → "from Braid's last five days as a band"
"included in the band's" → "included in their"


### Reception and legacy
"pop melodies"," → "pop melodies" on Frame & Canvas," with the target
"which were" → "which he wrote were"
"The record cemented itself as one of the band's" → "In the opinion of Blake, the album cemented itself as one of Braid's"
"as to say by the end" → "as to say that by the end"
"said it was" → "said the album was"
"in Atkinson, a" → "in Atkinson, alongside a"
"over 16,000 copies." → "over 16,000 copies worldwide."
"emo album lists by" → "emo album lists, being named to lists by"
Target Vulture to Vulture.com per MOS:LINK2SECT
"said the album establish" → "said the album established"
"The album was an" → "Frame & Canvas was an"
"scene that was based" → "scene, the latter of which was based"
"favorite Braid album: "You" → "favorite Braid album, saying: "You"
"US tour where they performed" → "US tour, during which they performed"


### Track listing
All music by Braid, lyricist noted below in brackets.[11] All songs produced by J. Robbins and Braid.[10] → All music by Braid.[11] All songs produced by J. Robbins and Braid.[10]
I have suggested the above change, since you should use the track listing template to lay the tracks out since the writers are known for all of them and see MOS:TABLECAPTION


### Personnel
Use div col to place Additional musicians and Production on the right from Braid


### References
Copyvio score looks good at 24.2%
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
Wikilink AllMusic on ref 1
Wikilink The Daily Illini on ref 4
Wikilink Stereogum on ref 5
Wikilink Noisey on ref 8 per MOS:LINK2SECT
Wikilink Polyvinyl Record Co. on ref 10
Remove the publisher from ref 12
WP:OVERLINK of AllMusic on ref 13
Wikilink CMJ New Music Report on ref 15 per MOS:LINK2SECT
Wikilink Modern Fix on ref 16
Wikilink LAS Magazine on ref 19
Wikilink SF Weekly on ref 20
Wikilink Consequence of Sound on ref 21
Wikilink Kerrang! on ref 22
Wikilink LA Weekly on ref 23
Wikilink NME on ref 24
Wikilink Rolling Stone on ref 25
Target Vulture to Vulture.com on ref 26 per MOS:LINK2SECT
Wikilink OC Weekly on ref 27


### Final comments and verdict
Done. Yeepsi (talk) 16:31, 14 October 2020 (UTC)

Yeepsi Once again a quick response,  Pass now! --K. Peake 06:01, 15 October 2020 (UTC)