# Talk:Laser Beam

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:59, 19 May 2016 (UTC)


### Infobox
The link to the album should be to "JPN (album)" instead of "JPN (Perfume album)"
You can remove the caption that reads "Laser Beam" artwork


### Lead
#### Paragraph 1
Who described it as "an electronic song, influenced by 8-bit music"?


#### Paragraph 2
Can you reword "shifting physical shipments" to "physical sales" or along that line?


### Background and release
#### Paragraph 1
Reword second sentence to "It was also recorded, mixed, and mastered by Nakata."
"track list" --> "tracklist"


#### Paragraph 2
Great work!


### Composition
Again, who described it as "an electronic song, influenced by 8-bit music"?
No source for the lead sentence
Capitalize the "b" in "Laser beam" please
"groups" --> "group's"


### Critical response
#### Paragraph 1
Nothing! Nada! :)


#### Paragraph 2
You seem to use "positive" quite a bit, you could also say that they favored the single, enjoyed it, applauded it, etc....
You also use semi-colon marks a bit, you can cut it back a bit if possible please


### Commercial performance
"groups" --> "group's"
Make sure plural matches nouns; "it" should be singular and "they" should be plural -- "in their second week of sales" for example.
"groups" --> "group's"
Again, could you reword "shifting physical shipments" to "physical sales" or along that line?


### Music video
#### Paragraph 1
"which appears on the making-up and clothes." --> "which is reflected in the makeup and clothing."


#### Synopsis
You did a great job at the synopsis; and at them in general–I have nothing to add! :)


### Promotion and live performances
"Kasuka na Kaori" should be in quotation marks
"3%" should be spelt out as "three percent" please


### Track listing
Change title to "Track listings and formats" please


### External links
You could add the template that would provide a link for MetroLyrics of the song; use "Edge of the Ocean" for an example, also at the bottom of the article :)


### End of GA Review:
Very few comments, great work! On hold as usual, good luck! Carbrera (talk) 02:32, 26 May 2016 (UTC)

Hi @Carbrera: All done :) CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 02:29, 28 May 2016 (UTC)