# Talk:Franzisca Baruch

Stern, Gideon; Friedlaender, Stern (1984). "People of the Book - Franzisca Baruch" (PDF). Israel Bibliophiles Newsletter (4): 1-4.
The link is to wordpress that's not allowed in the article, so let it be here. Artem.G (talk) 21:17, 13 November 2021 (UTC)

It was a beautifully written and sourced Wakelamp d[@-@]b (talk) 12:13, 4 December 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Franzisca Baruch/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 10:54, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

I'll have a go at this one. Chiswick Chap (talk) 10:54, 3 January 2022 (UTC)


### Comments
An interesting and well-written article.

Thanks!
I think "Staatliche Kunstgewerbeschule Berlin" could have an interlanguage link Kunstgewerbeschule Berlin, which redirects to the fearsome Unterrichtsanstalt des Kunstgewerbemuseums Berlin.
done
"A year later, in 1921, she drew the letters for the Passover Haggadah, which was decorated with woodcuts by Jacob Steinhardt,[2] she also wrote Hebrew and German text." Not sure I understand the last clause — what does it have to do with the rest of the sentence?
removed, I can't remember why should it be here.
The quotations from "recombination of historical and modern" ... onwards need to be attributed and cited. The words might be Ishai Mishory's?
done
"Reichskunstwart" is glossed "Reich art counselor", an awkward phrase which doesn't suggest the roles of regulation and mediation; the Reichskunstwart article has instead "Imperial Art Protector" which perhaps works better, though still with an odd ring. Google suggests "Imperial Art Warden", hmm. Perhaps "Imperial Art Monitor" would do.
done, though i think both "Reich art counselor" and "Imperial Art Monitor" sound strange...
"in the centenary" - perhaps "on". The sentence ends with "!." which seems excessive.
done
"based on the Haggadah from 1526 by Gershom ben Solomon Kohen" - perhaps "Gershom ben Solomon Kohen's 1526 Haggadah"?
done
"aliyah": perhaps gloss this (immigration from the diaspora).
done
"the King Amanullah" - drop the "the".
done
The Jewish Virtual Library is flagged as a generally unreliable source. What makes it usable in this case?
I didn't know that it's unreliable. I removed it, everything in the text is supported by other sources so it's not really needed here.
The 1947 portrait is by Alfred Bernheim. As a formal portrait it should be attributed in the caption. You could also i.l.l. him to the article on the German wiki.
done
OK, that's about it from me. Chiswick Chap (talk) 11:19, 3 January 2022 (UTC)

@Chiswick Chap: Thanks a lot for the review! I think I've addressed everything. Artem.G (talk) 13:22, 3 January 2022 (UTC)
Excellent, good work. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:42, 3 January 2022 (UTC)