# Talk:Downtown Triangle (Jerusalem)

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:38, 28 July 2014 (UTC)

Right, I will take a look and jot queries below....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 14:38, 28 July 2014 (UTC)

Lead
From the mid-1940s through the 1960s, the Triangle was "the commercial, cultural and economic center of...Jerusalem" - surely we can write this without quotes and paraphrase differently?
 Done Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
the commercial viability of the Triangle deteriorated - erg, if it did decline, just say so, no need to go on about viability if it was an actuality I think......
I changed "deteriorated" to "declined" - is that what you wanted? Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
Sort of...when I wrote it I was more concerned about the term "viability" but on thinking about it again am ok with it. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 01:56, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
History
Did the old commercial segment(s) of Jaffa Road overlap with what is now the Triangle, or was it in a different bit?
The commercial strip called Jaffa Road extended from the Old City Walls westward, passing the triangle. I made a small change in the article, and will try to see if I can find a source. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 Done Good thing I looked at the source again. I edited this section accordingly. Yoninah (talk) 21:18, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
How did the name arise? was it officially designated or did it come about as an informal name?
Since the British developed a triangular district, it was popularly called "the Triangle". I'll try to find a source. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 Done Source added in parentheses. Yoninah (talk) 21:18, 2 August 2014 (UTC)
demand for "detective stories, histories, and newspapers from Germany and England". - I think we can rewrite this without quotes too..
 Done Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
A standout example is the Sansur building - don't need to mention it is a "standout example" as merely mentioning  the building here notes this...let the facts speak for themselves.
 Done Yoninah (talk)
I'd link cold cuts, neo-Renaissance, classicist
 Done Yoninah (talk)
Decline and rebirth
weaning customers away from the city center. - I'd say "weaning off" or "drawing away" but not "weaning away"....
 Done Yoninah (talk)
Bombing attacks
I'd not have  "(see Ben Yehuda Street bombings)" in body of text but make a seealso note under the header and maybe note how many there'd been or discuss a tiny bit more.

OK, will expand. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
I think I'd have Zion Square refrigerator bombing as a single sentence rather than a seealso. Also does the area have any obvious increased security or memorials from these? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 00:40, 3 August 2014 (UTC)
 Done I expanded the section and moved the Zion Square refrigerator bombing into a sentence. I found only one mention of a memorial, though the next time I go downtown I could look around for other, smaller memorial plaques. There is no increased security presence to my knowledge. Yoninah (talk) 21:53, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
Landmarks
If many of these won't have independent daughter articles, I'd add a sentence or two to give them some colour and make the section less listy.
OK, will expand. Yoninah (talk) 01:02, 29 July 2014 (UTC)
 Done Yoninah (talk) 22:01, 19 August 2014 (UTC)
Otherwise a nice read and (I think) within striking distance of GA status...cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 15:03, 28 July 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the speedy review! I'll start addressing your concerns. Yoninah (talk) 17:31, 28 July 2014 (UTC)
I apologize, I've been unable to work on this due to work and family concerns. Expanding the bombing attacks section is going to take some time; I was planning to research that when I expand Ben Yehuda Street. The expansion of Landmarks is more minor, but I'm not finding time to do it. Could this be put on hold? Yoninah (talk) 15:04, 8 August 2014 (UTC)
Yeah, happy to leave this open until you get to it - prefer that it gets done right once rather than yo-yoing, so take your time and I will leave this open. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:39, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
Thanks. I think I covered everything now. Yoninah (talk) 22:01, 19 August 2014 (UTC)
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Pass or Fail:  a nice read. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 03:14, 20 August 2014 (UTC)
Thanks! Yoninah (talk) 11:21, 20 August 2014 (UTC)

Hi everone, In fact, I think that it is necessary to merge the two articles (this and Zion Square) and my colleagues in the Arabic Wikipedia suggested that because, although they are separate areas, but the articles have the same history and the same landmarks, I think that the article Zion Square should be placed as a section in Downtown Triangle (Jerusalem), what do you think about that--Anass (talk) 16:59, 8 July 2018 (UTC)

Please read WP:SPINOFF. Adding another article to this one would only bloat the page. Look forward to similar expansion of Ben Yehuda Street (Jerusalem), which is also part of the Downtown Triangle. Yoninah (talk) 17:06, 8 July 2018 (UTC)

See discussion at Talk:Jerusalem#Map by neighbourhoods needed. Arminden (talk) 18:51, 16 January 2022 (UTC)