# Talk:Greef Karga

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:06, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for taking on another review, The Rambling Man! — Hunter Kahn 16:41, 26 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

"the Bounty Hunters' Guild," always a bit odd to "part link" a "formal title".  I would unlink and go for linking bounty hunter at the next chance.
Yeah, I think you're right. Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
" in a handful of episodes" curious about this as there's  only been a handful of episodes of the whole show!  Four episodes really is still a handful!
lol Changed this to say he was originally only supposed to make a brief apperance. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"ensures everyone follows" not everyone, just bounty hunters.  Presumably "ensures its members follow"?
Good call. Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"so far"  is a little like WP:CURRENTLY. Maybe "as of the end of  the first season"?
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
What's a cantina?
Changed to "bar". — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"a big job" seems a little informal...
Changed to "a lucrative job". — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"who insists of meeting " ENGVAR?  insists on meeting?
Yup, should've been "on". Fixed that. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"the Force " the should be inside the pipe.
Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
Lots of triple-referencing going on, per WP:CITEKILL any chance of reducing it a little?
I can certainly do this; will get on it tomorrow, as it's getting a bit late for me now. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"him.[20][17][21] " ref order.
Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
I think you've linked "stormtroopers" in other similar articles.
Oops, right you are. Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
""Chapter 8: Redemption"" you've already linked this as the season's "finale".
Removed the wikilink. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"The character is slated to return..." well Weathers has said he's definitely in it so isn't it stronger than slated?
Changed to "will return". — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"Actor Carl Weathers said..." no need to reintroduce Weathers here.
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
Particularly as you have "Weathers has described his " in the  previous sentence.
Oops, yeah, lol.
"and Carl Weathers has" no need for Carl here.
Removed, — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"2019,[45][46] According" should be a period.
Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"showrunner Jon Favreau " both overlinked.  And both overlinked in the caption too.
Removed the wikilinks from the photo caption and the Portrayal section. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"enjoys"  tense?
Changed to "enjoyed". — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
" series, and in " one too many run-ons.  Split here.
Done. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"Weathers said ... Weathers performed... Weathers said " repetitive.
It's Weathers' world, my friend; we're just living in it! Lol I changed a few "Weathers" to other words to reduce the repetition. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"study the different energies the director and actors brought" feels whimsical, can this be "quoted" rather than written in Wikipedia voice?
I just reworded it a bit. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"particular enjoyed" +ly
Oops, yeah, fixed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
" with "The Client", " -> "with the Client"
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"Screen Rant ranked" overlinked.
Removed the link in Critical Reception. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
"performance of Carl Weathers, " no need for Carl.
Changed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
That's all I have so I'll put it on hold for now.  The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:45, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Thanks again The Rambling Man! I'll try to take care of that WP:CITEKILL issue tomorrow and then I think we'll be all set unless you had anything else... — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
Hunter Kahn No, I have nothing more.  Give me a ping when you're ready for a final run-through.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:04, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
The Rambling Man I believe I've addressed the WP:CITEKILL issue you had raised (most of the examples of three citations were ones in which I could simply remove one because it was just reinforcing information from the other two) so I think that addresses everything you had now, but let me know if you had any other thoughts or comments. Thanks! — Hunter Kahn 21:26, 1 May 2020 (UTC)
All good, thanks for your hard work.  I'm promoting.  I'll hopefully pick up another of your nominations in due course!  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 21:34, 1 May 2020 (UTC)