# Talk:Explorers on the Moon

This review is transcluded from Talk:Explorers on the Moon/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Ssven2 (talk · contribs) 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

I will review this article. Thank you.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 11:31, 24 September 2015 (UTC)


#### Comments
Lede
"Explorers on the Moon (French: On a marché sur la Lune) is the seventeenth of The Adventures of Tintin, " — Seventeenth what?
Volume! I have no idea how I missed that. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
"who are aboard a manner rocket mission to the moon." — Do you mean "manned rocket"? Sounds better than "manner rocket", which might make the reader feel that the rocket lacks mannerisms! LOL.
Well spotted! Changed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
"of the story. The story was" — Avoid repetition of story.
I've gone with "volume" here although would be up for any alternative suggestions. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
Synopsis
"disrupting the artificial gravity and sending everyone floating" — Wikilinks for "artificial gravity" and "floating" could be better for those readers who are not wholly aware of the two terms. For clarity's sake.
Good point! I've added a link to the former although could not find an appropriate link for "floating". Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
Found the link for 'floating' myself.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)
A simpler word for "fissure" would be good as the word seems a tad complicated. Maybe chasm?
I've gone with chasm, although I think that it is probably on a similar level to fissure. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
Actually, chasm is a synonym of fissure, which sounded more scientific and some readers might not understand it well.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 03:13, 25 September 2015 (UTC)
History
"Publishers were unhappy" — Who? Casterman or Turner and Cooper?
That would be Casterman. I've changed it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
Thats about it from me. Once again, great job, Midnightblueowl. Do ping me when you have resolved the comments.  — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 12:24, 24 September 2015 (UTC)

That's great Ssven2; many thanks! Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:13, 24 September 2015 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors: 

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists: 

Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section: 

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: 

C. No original research: 

Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects: 

B. Focused: 

Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias: 

Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc: 

Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: 

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: 

Overall: Passed, my queries were met and solved by the nominator.
Pass or Fail: 

@Midnightblueowl: Thank you for resolving them, Midnightblueowl. Congratulations!   — Ssven2 Speak 2 me 03:15, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

How come we have a GA on this book which doesn't even mention Bob de Moor? Seems like a serious oversight. Destination Moon (comics), also a GA, does mention him (the fact that he got hired), but again nothing further. According to Pierre Assouline, De Moor already played a "pivotal role" in Destination Moon (backgorunds, and the rocket!)[1], and we all know how much the Moon landscapes by De Moor were essential in the look of the "Explorers" story. The De Moor biography has more information[2]. Fram (talk) 08:26, 5 April 2017 (UTC)