# Talk:Cyclone Lua

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:06, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

Any reason you left out the dates in the infobox?
"Originating in a broad low pressure area which formed northwest" - "which" --> "that"
"to close for well over two days" - how much over two days? Three days? Four?
"but damage was limited by the lack of development in the storm's path" - since "development" could also be used in terms of the storm forming, perhaps use "population" instead?
Could you clarify that "RAAF Learmonth" is an airport in Western Australia?
If Lua didn't become a tropical low until March 2, why does the infobox have it start on the 9th?
"though at around 0500 UTC" - what day?
"Simultaneously, the JTWC issued its first tropical cyclone warning on 17S" - simultaneously to when? When did JTWC begin this?
"and the storm attained its peak 10-minute maximum sustained winds of 165 km/h (105 mph)," - when?
" Lua made landfall near Pardoo, about 150 km (95 mi) east-northeast of Port Hedland, at 3 pm Western Australia Standard Time (0700 UTC), while still at peak intensity" - what day?
" Port of Port Hedland, the Port Authority" - to avoid saying "port" so many times, perhaps say "officials" closed, instead, and switch around the order of the sentence?
All in all, really good work on this. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:06, 3 December 2013 (UTC)

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