# Talk:Football Glory

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:26, 6 May 2021 (UTC)

Comments

"One (against an..." this feels awkward.  I would say it's a one- or two-player game and then describe how each mode works.  Perhaps even just leave it as one/two player for the lead.
 Simplified. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"on varying pitches" perhaps "various" unless you mean the pitch itself changes.
 Simplified. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"with London-based " no need to link London.
 Done. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
Was the successor game not notable enough for an article?
Doubtful; I found just one review and overall coverage is scarce. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"They play with" Perhaps more like "Clubs available for selection by the players are from..." or similar?
 Reworded. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"National teams star in..." feature rather than star.
 Reworded. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"and English League" -> "English Football League"
 Done. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"the MS-DOS port" link port.
 Done. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"refereeing decision, they can chase down and argue with the referee" link referee for "refereeing" not wait until "referee".
 Done. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"from London. He talked with Croteam all day" don't link London and I doubt it was "all day"...
The source says "all day", albeit a direct quote from Holmes. The implication is that they worked much longer per day than usual, causing Holmes's odd 50/10 sleep rhythm.  Reworded. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
"about five-a-side football"" featuring?
 Done. IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
If you use access dates, do it consistently.
Access dates are set for those sources that I could actually access. I never really 'accessed' the Croteam pages as they have been dead for decades; I only ever accessed the archives. Should I still add access dates for these? IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
No, it's fine I understand your approach.  The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:00, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
A very nice article, good work.  I'll put it on hold while these points are discussed.  Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 20:18, 8 May 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review. I made some changes and left individual comments above. Regards, IceWelder [✉] 00:05, 9 May 2021 (UTC)
All good, happy to promote this, nice work. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:00, 9 May 2021 (UTC)

I just came across a scene early in Talos Principle II that specifically mentions this game and its release year. Is there a known link between these two games? 2601:601:827F:70D0:9754:608:B651:B62C (talk) 00:50, 12 November 2023 (UTC)

They're by the same developer, but that's probably it. IceWelder [✉] 10:53, 12 November 2023 (UTC)