# Talk:Brandon Kintzler

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Reviewer: Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk · contribs) 00:49, 4 April 2021 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 00:49, 4 April 2021 (UTC)


### Lead
No comma needed after 2007; not an independent clause.
”pitch at the” – “pitch in the”, just to make it clear he appeared in the game.
Link All-Star
”by pitching two scoreless final innings.” – “by pitching a scoreless inning to end both of the games.”  - A little clearer.
Take out “to a minor league contract” at the end of the lead.  It’s correct, but since he made the roster, this is unnecessarily detailed for the lead.
 Done all of the above.


### Early life
Make a separate sentence for Palo Verde High School—I know what you meant, but to take the sentence literally, it looks like he attended the school between the ages of 10 and 12.
Specify that he was at PCC in 2003.
 Done both.


### Minor league system
I think for quotes, the period technically goes inside the quotation marks (last sentence).  Periods and commas are within; semicolons and colons are without.  Change this for other quotes in the article.
 Not done per WP:LQ, periods and commas are only placed within quotations when quoting a full sentence. Other GA reviewers have been on my ass about that one.


### Independent leagues
I think you can take out “in his new role”—really just need to mention this if they moved him back to the bullpen for whatever reason.
”of rejoining the MLB” – “of making the major leagues,” since he hadn’t been in MLB yet.
”Kintzler was offered an acting role, portraying former Oakland Athletics pitcher Tim Hudson in Moneyball” – “Kintzler was offered the role of former Oakland Athletics pitcher Tim Hudson in the film Moneyball.”
” to start in the” – “to start the”
 Done all of the above.


### Milwaukee Brewers
Any story on what got the Brewers interested in signing an independent league pitcher?  (If not, that’s ok—just checking!)
found a quote from the scout who attended the game
” He started 2010 with Huntsville as well, going 1–0” – since you started the previous sentence with he, how about “Beginning 2010 with Huntsville as well, he went 1—0”
Can take out the comma after appearances.
Please include his 2010 major league stats.
” and required surgery to insert a screw” – “an injury which required surgery, in which a screw was inserted.”
 Partly done sentence read a little clunky, so I reworded it
” His season ended” – “The injury ended his season after only nine relief appearances.”
Could you include his ERA for his 2011 appearances?
”He planned to return to the Brewers in 2012…” – This sentence doesn’t need any commas, since there is only one independent clause (clause with a subject and verb that could stand on its own as a sentence).
” He began the season on the disabled list, and was designated for assignment on June 28.”  -  “Kintzler started the year on the disabled list and was designated for assignment on June 28 while still out with the injury.
”unclaimed on assignment” – Technically, I think it’s waivers instead of assignment, and you should probably link waivers.
” leagues, and spent time” – “leagues. He spent time”
Take out the comma after Nashville.
2012 stats?
” Kintzler played five shutout appearances at the start of the 2014 season while experiencing shoulder discomfort, and he was placed on the disabled list on April 12.” – “Despite starting the 2014 with five scoreless appearances, Kintzler experienced shoulder discomfort and was placed on the disabled list on April 12.”
” pitching a 3.24 ERA” – “posting a 3.24 ERA”
” due to injury and recovery, and spent most of his time” – “due to the injury and spent most of his time”
2015 ERA?
 Done all of the above


### Minnesota Twins
Something’s wrong with the Twins section.  Kintzler’s first game with them was May 7, not June 8.  This will need to be rewritten—also, don’t call his first appearance with them his major league debut.
” would rotate” – “would share”
”called to fill in” – “called upon to fill in”
” He recorded 17 saves in 20 attempts with the Twins, and recorded a 3.15 ERA in 54 seasonal appearances” – “He made 54 appearances for the Twins, posting a 3.15 ERA and converting 17 saves in 20 attempts.”
Don’t need American League linked twice.
” had recorded a 2.35 ERA, and led the American League with 23 saves” – “had posted a 2.35 ERA and was leading the American League with 23 saves”
 Done


### Washington Nationals
”There, he” – “Kintzler”
Take out the comma after only one save
Perhaps mention that the Cubs won the NLDS three games to two?
” Shortly after his departure” – This sentence should really come after the one about him being traded, so people will know what the departure was.  You can either move it to the Cubs section, or you can move the sentence about the trade to the Nationals section (either is fine).
 Done all of the above


### Chicago Cubs
“in part to give his closing spot to Wander Suero” – “partly because the Nationals wanted to make Wander Suero their closer.”
Combined stats for 2018?
” He spent the season in a setup role for the Cubs, pitching in…posting” – “Serving as a setup man for the Cubs, Kintzler pitched in…posted”
Link injured list, since this was called the disabled list last time Kintzler got hurt.
 Done all of the above


### Miami Marlins
Probably should explain that the 2020 season was shortened due to the virus; that’ll make it more understandable that he led the team with 12 saves.  I mentioned this in Sergio Romo; you can probably just copy the sentence straight from that if you like.
Also, put the date of Opening Day.
 Done both


### Philadelphia Phillies
” The decision sparked confusion among some” – I would just take this sentence out; it’s not really a big deal, and he made the roster anyway.
 Done


### Pitcher profile
”Kintzler is considered” – better specifically write who considers him.  WP editors are pretty picky with sentences like this!
” initially honed” – Doesn’t make much sense, as honed literally means “sharpened.”  Either he “honed” it (already had it and worked to make it better), or he “started throwing” it—please specify which.
Take out “Cubs closer” in front of Pedro Strop – not incorrect, but it might be misread to imply he is currently the team’s closer.  The link will be sufficient to explain who he is.
 Partly done I switched it to "Cubs teammate", because they played together at the same time
” which he attributes” – “which he attributed”
” Kintzler fills out the rest of his pitches with” – “Kintzler’s other pitches are”
 Done all of the above.


### Personal life
Do we know the name of Kintzler’s second child?
best I could find was an interview with Kintzler's father where he said kid #2 was a daughter. No name.
For the MLB.com references, make sure they’re formatted the same way.  Some have Advanced Media Group listed as the publisher, while others have Major League Baseball.  I think Major League Baseball is the better way, but as long as it’s consistent, I’m fine with it.
 Done
Otherwise, references look good!
Images look good, well-placed.
Article is stable!
Overall, nice start! The one big issue is that the 2016 season seems to have some wrong information - everything else is just minor fixes.  I'll take another look once you address these changes, but the article seems well on its way to GA status! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 02:12, 4 April 2021 (UTC)

Sanfranciscogiants17 I believe I've addressed everything except for the quotes, which I talked about above. As for the 2016 information, I think I just got confused because June 8 was his first game as the Twins' closer. Kncny11 (shoot) 21:53, 4 April 2021 (UTC)
Understood--thanks for bringing that stuff about the quotes to my attention. Looks good now, passing. Excellent work! Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 11:49, 5 April 2021 (UTC)