# Talk:Carolina Marsh Tacky

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Reviewer: Jimfbleak -  talk to me? 08:30, 26 October 2009 (UTC)

Lead

First four sentences go singular-plural-singular-plural
 well-developed "well adapted" perhaps?
used by the colonists during the American Revolution, and used by South Carolinians - Do you need the second "used"?
for farm work, herding cattle and hunting throughout the centuries. reads oddly to me, can the centuries be associated with used? ie '"used through the centuries"

the goals of mapping the breed's place among the horse breeds of the world and beginning a stud book for the breed. In 2007, an association was begun with the goal of preserving and promoting the breed, are currently developing a breed registry and stud book. - Bit repetitive, two goals, four breeds, two stud books.
Characteristics

grulla is a DAB, should it be grullo?.
      Afraid I have not been able to find what you mean by DAB but please reference this article - I prefer grulla as a Spanish speaker and it is of Spanish origin, but not a word that changes depending on the sex of object described like rojo - roja as it derives from a noun originally   Refer to this article: http://www.ultimatehorsesite.com/colors/dun.html MadelineHere (talk) 21:55, 28 September 2010 (UTC)

The head is wide between eyes... - does this mean the eyes are set well apart on the head?
as well as continuing their traditional work hunting and herding cattle. hunting cattle? needs rephrasing
   While the writer may mean that they are used to hunt from (and they are), as well as to herd cattle, cattle in swamps such as those in SC, GA, and FL, often split off into small groups or even travel alone.  Men do go out to "hunt cattle" and are probably often mounted on Marsh Tackys and Florida Cracker horses. MadelineHere (talk) 21:55, 28 September 2010 (UTC)

History

More horses were added to the population that would become the Marsh Tacky through horses that were purchased in the Spanish settlement of St. Augustine in Florida, used as pack horses on Native American trade routes, and sold when the traders reached Charleston. three "horses",
Charleston is a DAB
Saving the breed

"Conservation" possibly more concise section header
the Carolina Marsh Tacky was the most common horse for most of their history.
 breed numbers declined, and was thought to have gone extinct during the 1980s and 1990s. - What was thought?
 the breed, and the breed two more breeds
save the breed from extinction, a bill has been introduced in the South Carolina legislature to designate this breed two more breeds
the ALBC began investigating the Marsh Tacky to see if it was truly a descendent of Spanish stock, and during their
I made these changes, refs not checked yet Jimfbleak -  talk to me? 10:58, 26 October 2009 (UTC)

All of the above changes have been made (I think!). Please let me know if they have been addressed acceptably. Thank you for your review! Dana boomer (talk) 12:40, 26 October 2009 (UTC)
Refs OK, no images to check. I've made [http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?
I have photos I have taken of a grulla Marsh Tacky mare and her filly that could be used. The filly shows clear zebra striping on her legs.  MadelineHere (talk) 21:55, 28 September 2010 (UTC)
title=Carolina_Marsh_Tacky&diff=322125565&oldid=322121970 a couple more tweaks. OK, let's do it!
GA review (see here for criteria)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 
It is stable.
No edit wars etc.: 
Overall:  
Pass/Fail:  
Thanks again for your review! It is much appreciated! Dana boomer (talk) 14:54, 26 October 2009 (UTC)

I would be glad to gather that information with guidance on how to submit it to this page.  MadelineHere (talk) 21:59, 28 September 2010 (UTC)