# Talk:James Parfitt

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 17:59, 9 September 2018 (UTC)

I will review this article today or tomorrow. Fair warning, I don't know much about cricket, just seems like an interesting guy. Cheers,  « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  17:59, 9 September 2018 (UTC)
Lead
"provide more succinct arguments" - more than what? Maybe "very succinct"?
Rephrased this. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
"Primarily played for his fast-medium pace bowling, Parfitt played for both" - double use of "played" isn't ideal. Maybe "used" or something similar? « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  00:48, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
Changed as suggested. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
Life and judicial career
Not 100% necessary, but you could link Roman Catholicism
Linked. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
I would expand "BA" to "Bachelor of Arts" or use the {{Abbr}} template
Expanded. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
"Weybridge, Surrey and for three years at The Oratory School" - add "then" after "and"
Changed as suggested. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
"a role he continued until 1918." - recommend changing "continued" to "maintained"
Changed as suggested. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
I would do an interwiki link to wiktionary:witticism, since it is not a common word. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  00:48, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
Changed as suggested. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
Cricket career
Being a novice cricket person, I would link Slip (cricket). I don't know what mid-off is, but there isn't a Wikipedia article that I can tell. Also, wicket.
Linked. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
"during the school holidays,[9] and made his debut in August 1883" - I would split in two, as it is a long sentence. i.e. "holidays. He made his debut"
Changed as suggested. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
Bowled is linked twice in the body of the article (WP:DUPLINK)
Removed one link. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
Somerset is linked twice in the body of the article « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  01:11, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
Oddly, I can only find it linked once in the body. Somerset is linked once, and Somerset County Cricket Club once too. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
Images
File:Parfitt, JJ.jpg is almost certainly in PD, but is safely claimed as fair use. I would investigate this more to see if it is old enough to meet PD requirements, but for this review the tag and rationale are sufficient. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  17:59, 9 September 2018 (UTC)
I imagine you're right, but I don't know any of the original publication details, and there is a mathematical chance that life of the photographer plus 70 years hasn't been hit. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
References
I don't know if it is just me, but none of the Cricket Archive links work. here says they do, so I don't know what's up. Just check again and confirm they work for you.
All works fine for me, though it hits a paywall. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
Everything else looks good here. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  01:11, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
Overall
Everything looks good. Just a few minor items.  « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  01:11, 10 September 2018 (UTC)
Thanks for your review. Harrias talk 06:02, 13 September 2018 (UTC)
Awesome, everything looks good. Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:45, 13 September 2018 (UTC)