# Talk:Edward N. Hall

His conflict with General Schriever (who essentially ended Hall's career) needs to be discussed in the article. DonPMitchell (talk) 18:26, 18 September 2013 (UTC)

yes indeed,
one of the links is incorrectJuror1 (talk) 17:32, 20 November 2017 (UTC)

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Edward N. Hall/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 09:50, 12 July 2022 (UTC)
I'll take a gander at this one. Comments to follow in next few days. Zawed (talk) 09:50, 12 July 2022 (UTC)

@Zawed: has this been forgotten? Hawkeye7 (discuss) 21:25, 19 July 2022 (UTC)
Whoops, things are getting away from me a bit...anyhoo, comments as follows:
Lead

Needs a bit of expansion
Y Expanded intro. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
Early life

link furrier, professional degree
Y Linked. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
He has a younger brother,: had a younger
Y Corrected. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
unusual for a first lieutenant.: do when we know when he was promoted from second to first lieutenant? Or should this be referring to second lieutenant?
Unfortunately, I don't have that information. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
Missile Development Work

with his wife and son David in 1946,: when I first read this, I was wondering what happened to the other two kids mentioned in the previous section but then realised they must not have had them yet. Perhaps to avoid confusion maybe say "with his family in 1946"
Y Changed as suggested. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
Hall, now a lieutenant colonel, joined the Western Development Division.: the abbreviation for WDD has already been introduced so should be used here.
Y Done. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
the project director of the Thor project in 1957,: the first usage of project here is probably redundant.
Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
Later life

He had been to a broken hip and other ailments.: something not right here and at the start of this paragraph the broken hip is mentioned. Is this a doubleup?
Y Deleted. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 11:34, 20 July 2022 (UTC)
Other stuff

No dupe links
Image tags OK
I fixed quite a few typos as I went along, but otherwise that's it for me. Zawed (talk) 09:37, 20 July 2022 (UTC)

@Zawed: All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:12, 21 July 2022 (UTC)
The changes look good. I am passing this as GA as I believe it meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:24, 22 July 2022 (UTC)

can we seriously improve the naming of the missiles in the photo?
We have like 8 items in the photo and only 4 missiles are named 2604:3D08:9B77:AB00:448A:D667:CC0D:97B2 (talk) 04:54, 18 August 2025 (UTC)

I have named all the missiles in the photo. Hawkeye7 (discuss) 19:35, 18 August 2025 (UTC)