# Talk:Life (Gen Hoshino song)

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Nominator: IanTEB (talk · contribs) 20:18, 5 December 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 09:08, 10 February 2025 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar): 

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section): 

b. (citations to reliable sources): 

c. (OR): 

d. (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects): 

b. (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): 

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/fail: 

(Criteria marked  are unassessed)
I will review this article over today and tomorrow! --K. Peake 09:08, 10 February 2025 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
"It was first released as" → "The song was first released as"
"song" is already at this point used twice. Adding another would sound repetetive, in my opinion.
Wouldn't it be suitable to mention in the comp sentence that "Life" is driven by piano and drum melodies?
 Done
The background vocals should be the second sentence instead of the first paragraph
Since Ua is not a featured artist, her background vocals are a part of the composition
This lead feels quite out of order; the commissioning of a new theme song should be before the actual comp info since this is talking about how the song was created in the first place
I have removed the second paragraph altogether. I think that placing too much emphasis on the artist's creative process will sound non-neutral and can, in instances, be undue weight.
Mention next to the gospel inspiration that this was to release listeners from ego and pressures
See above comment
"within its lyrics." → "within the lyrics."
 Done
"within its week of" → "within the week of"
Current wording flows better in my opinion
"The music video," → "An accompanying music video,"
"accompanying" here sounds unnecessary to me. What the music video is for would be understandable to most readers
""Life" was promoted by" → "The song was promoted by" and mention what year this New Year's Eve was for
 Done


### Background
[1] only specifies the games being pushed back to September, not October 2023 too
Changed source
"a new original theme song" → shouldn't this be worded as only "an original theme song" since that clearly implies it was a new song anyway?
 Done


### Writing and production
Img looks good!
The full quote is not showing for me when using Google translate on web browser from [4]; have you made sure to check it is displayed on [4] or is this an issue with the translation system?
I translate quotes myself and very seldom use translation. The results usually differ a bit from the original text while keeping its original meaning, for the sake of flow). If you want to cross reference it for accuracy, it comes from Hoshino's answer to the interviewer's second comment on page three.
The viewpoint of him not being a Christian does not appear to be mentioned by the translated source neither
It comments from this on page three: ゴスペルを取り入れるときに思っていることは、自分はクリスチャンではないから生半可な気持ちではやれないということと、真似になってはいけないということです
"machine-like qualities"." → "machine-like qualities.""
 Done
Last para looks good!


### Composition and lyrics
Audio sample looks good!
Pipe electric bass to bass guitar
Not done per WP:NOTBROKEN
Pipe handclaps to clapping
Not done per WP:NOTBROKEN
Remove pipe on programming
That would lead to a disambiguation page
[9] should be moved to after the most relevant member of personnel as [4] only supports the ending portion of the last sentence after the final clause
 Done
Remove wikilink on gospel music
 Done: good catch
Last para looks good!


### Release and promotion
Imgs look good, although you should wikilink music video there
First para looks good!
The D Soraki → the D Soraki per MOS:THEMUSIC
 Done; also changed within trans-titles of citations
Last para looks good!


#### Double A-side single
"disclose details on "Why"" → since this source does not name "Why" itself, maybe change to something like details on the second part of the A-side ?
 Done
"He revealed its title" → "He revealed the title of "Why"" per above in the given context
 Done
"in almost two years after" → "in two years after"
changed to 'in over two years'
"Beyond the Sequence" is not sourced as being an instrumental
Added in another source, which was conveniently already used within the article
Last para looks good!


### Reception
"he called these "new inventions" and" → "he called these innovative and"
 Done
The "lively" quote is not directly sourced, unless this is a fault with my translator
Altered to 'vivid'
"increased in depth with" → "increase in depth with" for correct tense
 Done
Last para looks good!


### Live performances
Img looks good!
"On September 21," → On September 21, 2023,"
 Done
The ref does not mention the performance having been removed
While you are right, it does include a link to the video, which is indeed removed.


### Personnel
Pipe handclaps to clapping
Not done per WP:NOTBROKEN
Pipe electric bass to bass guitar
Not done per WP:NOTBROKEN


### Track listing
Good


### Charts
Since these are not inside wiki templates, remove wikilinks on Oricon in the second table
I've removed the second table since these positions are not discussed within the article


### Release history
Pipe streaming to Streaming media
I've piped it to Music streaming service instead
Pipe CD to Compact disc
Not done per WP:NOTBROKEN


### Notes
Good


### References
Copyvio score looks solid at 17.5%!!!
MOS:CAPS issues with refs 35, 40, 42 and 49
Not done since capitalization does not apply to Japanese-language text


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed; done in the evening! --K. Peake 21:23, 11 February 2025 (UTC)
@Kyle Peake: I believe I've responded to all points! IanTEB (talk) 23:52, 11 February 2025 (UTC)
@IanTEB: Nice job, although the only fixes I would say are needed currently are to change to "within the week of" in the lead as "it" is used earlier in this sentence and remove link on programming altogether in comp since it was linked in previous section. --K. Peake 10:05, 13 February 2025 (UTC)
Done and done. I also reorganized the first paragraph order in accordance to the structure of various FAs. IanTEB (talk) 19:16, 13 February 2025 (UTC)
 Pass now, I see the work you have implemented and it easily meets the criteria what a great job! --K. Peake 20:56, 13 February 2025 (UTC)