# Talk:Mr. Songbird

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 19:14, 16 June 2022 (UTC)


### Infobox
Fine


### Lead
The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society, → year of release in between brackets
Done.
but removed it from the album's track listing late in the production process. Because the 12-track edition was issued in several European countries, the song's first release was in Sweden and Norway in October 1968. → but removed it from the album's track listing in a last-minute decision. However, the original 12-track edition had already been sent to several European countries. The song's
Done.
 Done


### Composition and recording
I would remove the image, doesn't add anything vital to the article
Fair enough. Removed.
Unlink the second instance of Andy Miller
Fixed.
recording for which began in earnest in March 1968 → recording for the album or song? It mentions both in the previous sentence.
Clarified that it's the album.
Mellotron → casual readers won't be familiarized with this, a small sentence between commas could go a long way
Added a bit on what a Mellotron is.
 Done


### Release and reception
The song therefore does → Therefore, the song does
Fixed.
Because of the last-minute → Despite the last-minute
I disagree. It's because the decision was made at the last minute that masters had already been sent away. If he made the decision earlier, they likely could have been halted. I don't think "Despite" would make much sense in that context.
Didn't the masters already been sent away when he made the decision? Maybe rephrase it. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:31, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
Tried rewording things to make it clearer.
featuring both a "blithe melody and toe-tapping arrangement" → as they both feature a "blithe melody and toe-tapping arrangement"
He's not talking about both "Wonderboy" and "Mr. Songbird", but just the latter, so I've tweak the wording to clarify that.
is comparable the best written → is comparable to the best written
Fixed.
released 25 January 1973 → released on 25 January 1973
Fixed.
 Done


### References
Fine
Sourcecheck: 4, 7, 12, 16, 20 and 21


### External links
Fine


### Overall
Personel section with producers, writers, engineers...
Personnel sections are required for albums by WP:PERSONNEL, the WP:SONGS doesn't actually required them for song articles. I try to include them where able, as on "I've Just Seen a Face", but with the Kinks I often just don't have any way to verify every musician on the recording. That's the case here, which is why there isn't one.
You need to mention the writer and producer on the body of the article.
Done.
 Done

Let me know once you are done. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 18:24, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
That should be everything. Thanks MarioSoulTruthFan. Tkbrett (✉) 18:54, 17 June 2022 (UTC)
I made some edits, see if you are ok with those and left a question. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:26, 18 June 2022 (UTC)
MarioSoulTruthFan, I think that introduced a typo, so I adjusted the sentence to improve its wording. The years are fine. Tkbrett (✉) 18:18, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
Great work, passing now. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:21, 20 June 2022 (UTC)
Thanks very much for the review, I appreciate it. Tkbrett (✉) 01:20, 21 June 2022 (UTC)