# Talk:Grimace's Birthday

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Nominator: TrademarkedTWOrantula (talk · contribs) 00:15, 13 April 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Cukie Gherkin (talk · contribs) 22:36, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Figured I would get back into the swing of things with a relatively smaller GA nomination. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 22:36, 16 April 2024 (UTC)

Just a heads-up that the nominator asked for permission to nominate as a minor contributor to the article; given its short length their help is welcomed. Happy to assist with this nomination if needed. ＶＲＸＣＥＳ (talk) 23:16, 16 April 2024 (UTC)
Infobox

Release date not mentioned outside of infobox
Mentioned.
Gameplay

Is the bubble power-up a passive or an active power-up?
Huh? From my experience, the bubble gives you the ability to float through the air. To move it upwards, you press the jump button.
Is the bonus level after completing multiple stages, or after every stage?
Played the full game. The bonus level happens after you complete every level.
Inconsistent use of 'player' and 'players'
Used "the player".
Plot

I feel like the plot section could be edited to flow a little more naturally, though I'd sooner not do that myself.
Tried something.
Reception

I feel like "many" is an exaggeration; maybe reframe it to say something like "Critics have commented on..."
Done.
I feel that the reception section could be expanded to focus on commentary on games as advertisement (I noticed that the Destructoid source commented on this, as well as McDonald's history of advertising to kids). Is there any angle here with more sources?
Oof. You'll have to ask Vrxces about that. I'm not a significant contributor.
Hi @Cukie Gherkin:, that's an interesting point but I am leaning to omission as that commentary does not exist. There are some passing tongue-in-cheek cynicism, but the idea of the  game reflecting a legacy of "insidious" advertising is not really explored outside the Destructoid article, and Handley's mixed emotions are about the broader trend and not the game. Welcome to add it in but I don't think its a glaring omission from the article. Most of the coverage of this game immediately dropped off in June 2023, which was when this article was made. ＶＲＸＣＥＳ (talk) 08:15, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
Wasn't going to fail it if this couldn't be achieved, it was more food for thought than anything else, if such reception existed. - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 09:24, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
Of course! No worries. Agree there's something interesting there, the whole thing is charmingly...off ＶＲＸＣＥＳ (talk) 21:18, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
Images

Rationales are good, though perhaps the second image could include something about it showing the Game Boy Color-like visuals that were discussed by critics?
Added.
Spotcheck

Checked the following sources: [1] [2] [3] [4]
Time Extension, GameSpot, and Gizmodo sources appear to be cited properly, but I find that the Destructoid source does not properly verify certain pieces of information. Certain details, like the number of shakes necessary to get more points and the mechanics of the mini-game, are not cited in the link. For the number, I would recommend just saying that you can collect multiple shakes in the level for points rather than specifying 40. There's also info that makes me confused: "And then there’s a mini-game that you get to choose, and that’s it. It’s over." What does it mean that you get to choose a mini-game?
I think the author means that you can choose what kind of cake to blow the candles out...
Comments

@TrademarkedTWOrantula: Reminding - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 12:52, 21 April 2024 (UTC)
 Self-trout I thought Vrxces was supposed to take care of this nomination since he is a significant contributor. Sorry for ignoring this review; I will get straight to it. TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 19:06, 21 April 2024 (UTC)
Let me know if you need any help if anything comes up. ＶＲＸＣＥＳ (talk) 00:29, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
Perfect timing. There's a question Cukie asked that I need help with (the second reception one). Thanks! TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 00:33, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
Maybe I should ping him... @Vrxces TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 00:48, 22 April 2024 (UTC)
@Cukie Gherkin: Finished. TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 23:42, 21 April 2024 (UTC)
@Cukie Gherkin: Still there? I think the review's done. TWOrantulaTM (enter the web) 22:52, 27 April 2024 (UTC)
Hey, sorry 'bout that, got caught up in other things. It seems adequately in keeping with GA standards now, so I'll pass it. However, I recommend updating the infobox to be a little more descriptive instead of "this is a gameplay screenshot," maybe talk about the mode that it's depicting? - Cukie Gherkin (talk) 02:47, 28 April 2024 (UTC)