# Talk:French battleship Vérité

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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 15:58, 13 September 2012 (UTC)

I'll review this soon.  MathewTownsend (talk) 15:58, 13 September 2012 (UTC)
review
"along with the rest of the French Mediterranean Fleet. She spent the rest based at Corfu" - "rest" (meaning the rest of the fleet)  and "rest" (meaning rest of war?)
Yeah, it should be "rest of the war".
"revolutionary British battleship HMS Dreadnought" - perhaps other words for "revolutionary" include "radically innovative design" or others - since you use these exact works repeatedly in multiple articles
e.g. French battleship Démocratie, Liberté class battleship, French battleship Justice, French battleship Vérité
to me it begins to look forumulaic? do you agree?
Yes, the design section is generally boilerplate that is customized as necessary, since it's mostly dry technical information.
"She displaced up to 14,489 metric tons (14,260 long tons; 15,971 short tons) at full load. She had a crew of between 739 and 769 officers and enlisted men. She was powered by three vertical triple expansion engines with twenty-two Belleville boilers."
Fixed.
"The three ships, representing France during the celebrations and commanded by Admiral Jules le Pord, were the first foreign ships to arrive.[4] The ships departed from Brest and arrived New York seven days later, having run at an average of 16 knots (30 km/h; 18 mph);" - is this a little out of order? Should the arrival be mentioned before their departure so that "arrived New York" is repeated?  - it confused me some
The line is more about the endurance of their engines, not so much about the trip itself - I feel it'd be out of place if it were moved earlier in the paragraph. I changed the second "arrived in" to "reached" though.
"As a result, the fleet was far out of position to catch the German battlecruiser SMS Goeben" - maybe this needs some more context, as was it the ships mission to catch the that German battlecruiser, or am I confused?
Should be more clear now - how does it look?
Caption for the last pic?
Added.
perhaps the situation regarding submarines should be noted - i'm assuming the French had none - were the Austrians the only ones that did?
No, the French did have submarines (as I recall, they were the continental power that had bought into the idea of submarines the most before the outbreak of war). I don't know what they were used for (and if they were even used for anything - their crews may have been withdrawn for convoy escorts).
I've made some copy edits that you're free to revert[1] - I see you fixed a screw up of mine! - wiki is really slow today, makes editing hard! Thanks!
MathewTownsend (talk) 18:17, 15 September 2012 (UTC)

All seem fine to me. And yeah, there was some kind of problem with the servers yesterday. Everything should be addressed - let me know if there's something I missed. Thanks for reviewing the article. Parsecboy (talk) 12:12, 16 September 2012 (UTC)
GA review-see WP:WIAGA for  criteria (and here for what they are not)

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Pass or Fail: 
pass!

Congratulations!  MathewTownsend (talk) 21:54, 17 September 2012 (UTC)

Here. Parsecboy (talk) 20:42, 26 July 2016 (UTC)