# Talk:Krista McCarville

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Reviewer: Kaiser matias (talk · contribs) 15:05, 26 August 2020 (UTC)

I'll review this over the next couple days. Kaiser matias (talk) 15:05, 26 August 2020 (UTC)

@Kaiser matias: Hello! I was just wondering if/when you plan to review this? It's no rush at all—I'm pretty busy irl, but I'll try to respond to comments. Allthegoldmedals (talk) 20:37, 4 September 2020 (UTC)
Sorry about the delay, I myself got caught up in some other things, but have had a chance to go through it now. Overall it looks pretty solid, but I wonder if there is anyway to expand on a couple sections: the personal life section is a little short, and doesn't really talk about her early life (like when she started curling and so on). I realise that can be difficult to expand on when there isn't sources, so certainly won't hold that against you if it's not possible. I also feel that the lead could, and should, be expanded. As it stands now it is just two sentences, while based on the article I feel it could be fleshed out a little more, and could not just note her medal placements but overall times in playing tournaments like the Scotties. I also think it may be good to include a mention that she's a teacher there, as it is an important fact to include as well. If you think those can be addressed let me know, and I'll be happy to take another look. And don't worry about being busy, just let me know once you get a chance to look at things. Kaiser matias (talk) 23:56, 5 September 2020 (UTC)
@Kaiser matias: Thanks for the comments! I added when she started curling at the beginning of the career section, because I feel like it's more relevant there. I added her parents to the personal life section, but there isn't much else notable I can find to add. I expanded the lead, but her being a teacher isn't really notable, so I think having it just in the personal life section is fine. If you disagree, we can discuss further. Let me know if there's anything else you see that should be adjusted. Allthegoldmedals (talk) 22:23, 6 September 2020 (UTC)
Great it looks good to me. Happy to pass it, well done. Kaiser matias (talk) 21:24, 8 September 2020 (UTC)