# Talk:Golf Club: Nostalgia

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Reviewer: Alexandra IDV (talk · contribs) 03:49, 26 November 2021 (UTC)
I will be doing this one.--AlexandraIDV 03:49, 26 November 2021 (UTC)
Images

Images are relevant and seem to be in order. I appreciate that you wrote alt text for them!
References

The RPS writer's name is Katharine, not Katherine.
Fixed, thanks for the catch - I have a tendency of typing things out phonetically..
This is not part of the GA criteria, but I believe the Unity source should have "Unity Technologies" in the publisher parameter rather than the website one, as it is not the name of a creative work.
Done
Looks good otherwise - RSs, and some primary sources for uncontroversial detail.
Infobox

Milojević, Stanković, and Stepković are only mentioned in the infobox, and not backed up by any sources.
Yeah, not sure where that came from either, replaced with just director and composer
The iOS and Android versions are for some reason not included in the platforms field in the infobox.
Fixed - holdover from previous version when I was not aware the mobile releases were a major thing
"Adventure" and "Role-playing" are only mentioned in the infobox, and not backed up by any sources. As we cannot use own analysis to determine genres, you should either cite a source or remove these (and their corresponding categories).
Removed
Lead

The iOS and Android releases are only given as year and month, while the rest are given as year, month, and day - I would suggest being consistent
Set all to YMD
"the super-rich" comes across as slightly casual wording to me
Changed to "extremely wealthy", but no idea if that's any better
Gameplay and synopsis

There are three "modes" of gameplay - the quotation marks seem unnecessary, as if the modes were "sort of, but not quite" modes.
Removed
We can assume that readers know what "nostalgia" means - I would remove the link.
Removed
Development and release

Would suggest rearranging things slightly for chronology, so that the iOS/Android release dates are mentioned along with the PC and console versions rather than as the first thing the reader learns about the development (Golf Club: Wasteland was developed by Igor Simić [...] also works much better as a topic sentence than The game was released for iOS [...] does).
Moved the dated release info and soundtrack addition to last paragraph
In an interview with Game World Observer, - unless what publication he was interview for is important somehow, I would just remove this bit and just focus on what he said.
Removed
Nitpick, but in order to can almost always be simplified to to.
Changed
Reception

though Ollie Reynolds of Nintendo Life noted that their reviewers found some of the neon signs [...] - is Reynolds not the single person at NL reviewing the game? Unless I'm missing something, I believe this should be written as "though Ollie Reynolds of Nintendo Life found [...]".
The review used wording like "we", "us", and "our", though that might just be journalistic. Changed.
Loades also thought that the level design was uninspired, with the "puzzle" elements - like with the "modes" earlier, this makes me wonder if they're "kind of but not really" puzzles - you can probably remove the quotation marks.
Removed quote marks
he wished the game doubled down on - comes across as too casual wording
Reworded
Other

Without any discussion in the article about games as art, the "see also" link feels like an inappropriate use of "Wikipedia's voice".
It was previously linked in the development section as the BI source explicitly stated Igor Simic realised the potential of video games as art. I have re-added a bit into the first paragraph of "Development and release" about that, though it might not flow well - what do you think? I might remove it again.
The article is not categorized as an iOS or Android game
Fixed, also changed 2021 -> 2018 (another remnant from the old structure of the article)
Looks good overall! I left a few notes for you, but they are all fairly minor. I will put this review on hold for the usual seven days - {{ping}} me when you have addressed the above or if you have any questions, and I will be with you as soon as possible! (although I will move this upcoming weekend, so there's a risk I won't be able to respond during Friday-Sunday).--AlexandraIDV 02:33, 29 November 2021 (UTC)

@Alexandra IDV: Items addressed, see comments above. Thanks for the review! eviolite (talk) 03:16, 29 November 2021 (UTC)
Thank you very much. I will go ahead and promote this now!--AlexandraIDV 12:30, 30 November 2021 (UTC)