# Talk:HSwMS Thor (1898)

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Nominator: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 17:09, 30 November 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 14:22, 2 December 2024 (UTC)

I'll have a look at this. Feel free to nudge me if I stall during the process. Gog the Mild (talk) 14:22, 2 December 2024 (UTC)

"File:HMS Thor (1898).jpg" licensing: As the author is unknown, how do we know they have been dead for 70 years?
Changed license.
"File:HMS Thor.jpg" needs a US PD tag.
Added.
Bibliography: Gard & Becker is not used as a source.
Added.
"The success of Oden". 1. This is the first sentence of the stand alone main article. I think you need to back up and introduce the topic. 2. What was the nature of this success?
Reworded.
" a three-ship class of first-class coastal defence ships. The ships differed from their predecessor". So the three replaced a single predecessor, yes?
The two refers to Thor and Niord.
"The three vessels are considered members of the same class." Mentioning the name of the third ship would be nice.
Added.
"After reconstruction". Give the date.
Added.
"The guns could fire a 200 kg (450 lb) shell". Is their range known?
Sadly not in the sources that I have access to.
"Two 25 mm (1.0 in) machine guns were carried by the pinnaces." 1. Two guns per pinnace, or one each for a total of two pinnaces? 2. How many pinnaces were there?
The sources do not explicitly say. The word pinnace is plural so it would be reasonable to assume two each with one gun but I feel it would be OR to speculate.
"barbettes protected by 100 mm (3.9 in) nickel-steel armour". 1. Is there a missing 'thick'? 2. Why is the composition of the armour mentioned in this instance, but no other?
1. There is. 2. The rest is Harvey steel. Clarified.
" Four 90 cm (35 in) searchlights were carried." This may fit more naturally into the previous paragraph.
Moved.
"a cost of SEK 1,871,000". 1. SEK in full at first mention please. 2. The MoS says "Most currency symbols are placed before the number, and unspaced ($123 not $ 123)."
1. Done 2. I have removed the space.
"a rolling keel". What might that be?
A bilge keel. Linked.
"which improved performance." Are any details of the improved performance known?
Unfortunately not in the sources that I can find.
"sell the remains for scrap". "remains" seems odd. What had been removed to cause only remains to be offered for sale?
Reworded.
A cracking little article, nice work. Gog the Mild (talk) 17:02, 2 December 2024 (UTC)

@Gog the Mild: Thank you. That is very kind. Please take a look at my changes and tell me if there is anything more that you think would help improve it. simongraham (talk) 01:13, 4 December 2024 (UTC)


### Checks
All sources are reliable.
Images are appropriately licensed.
Spot checks are fine.
Passes Earwig.