# Talk:Kaivalya Upanishad

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 05:23, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

@Nvvchar: Will review. Sainsf <^>Talk all words 05:23, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. I have collaborated with User:Ms Sarah Welch who will also respond.Nvvchar. 13:43, 3 February 2016 (UTC)


### Lead
Why is the name in italics while heading is not? It is not uniform in the text either.
Fixed. Both are italics.
Do not use citations in the lead. Use them only in main text.
Indeed. I moved some text and all sources from the lead into the main article. I had to move some text so that nothing in the lead appears unsourced/unsupported in the main article.
Upanishads linked twice.
Fixed.


### Etymology
Who is Deussen?
Added, wikified and source there verified


### Chronology
Link Shiva and Hinduism as they are first mentioned.
Done by @Nvvchar


### Structure
What is a poetic meter?
It should have been Vedic meter, wikified and added explanation
Duplinks: Mundaka Upanishad and Shvetashvatara Upanishad
 thus referencing them, yet building  Comma should be replaced with "And".
Done by @Nvvchar


### Content
Only one duplink : Brahma.
Done by @Nvvchar
translate Deussen and other scholars other scholars is vague, how about et. al.?
Fixed
You forget to mention "states the text" in places ,it is almost as if you are saying all this. Introduce that phrase regularly.
Done by @Nvvchar


### Commentaries
Sarvepalli Radhakrishnan translated it in his 1953 book The Principal Upanishads. No source for this?
Added
published first in 1971 "first published".
Done by @Nvvchar
@Sainsf: Thanks for the review. Your detailed review and points were helpful. @Nvvchar: Please double check my edits and if I missed anything or duplinks, please fix. Also, both @Redtigerxyz and you started this article a year ago, an initiative that is commendable. [[User:@Sainsf:|Ms Sarah Welch]] (talk) 00:44, 4 February 2016 (UTC)
@Sainsf: The text has been slightly modified by Ms Sarah  Welch due to shifting of references from the lead. All review issues have been addressed by her thoroughly. Pl see.Nvvchar. 01:20, 4 February 2016 (UTC)
@Nvvchar: Promoted. Congrats! Sainsf <^>Talk all words 05:46, 6 February 2016 (UTC)
Thank you very much,@Sainsf:.Nvvchar. 05:56, 7 February 2016 (UTC)