# Talk:German torpedo boat T24

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 23:50, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
I will review this one, comments to follow in due course. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 23:50, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
This looks in good shape. My comments:

"On 3 July T24 and her sister T25 departed for Western France." The following sentence mentions British coastal artillery, so for better context, I think it should be mentioned they were (presumably) going via the English Channel.
It's mentioned in the lede.
But the lede is supposed to be a summary of the body of the article, and it is not mentioned in the body. Zawed (talk) 08:19, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
Added, but I'd have thought that the mentions of French ports on the Channel visited en route would have informed the reader that they weren't taking the long route past Scotland.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 13:30, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
"through the Bay."; specify Bay of Biscay here, it is the first time it is mentioned.
See above
"threw spray over their forward guns that made them difficult to operate."; replace that with and
I think "which" works even better
"Korvettenkapitän Franz Kohlauf"; presumably commander of 4th Flotilla. If so, mention this.
"The German ships had been spotted first..."; This starts off quite a long sentence, consider breaking it up.
I've separated the bit covering T24's inaction with a semi-colon
"37 mm anti-aircraft guns"; shouldn't this be 3.7 cm for consistency with the armament of the T24 (I assume; the way this sentence is structured suggests you are referring to the exchange of fire so the 40mm is British).
Referring to the citations, it looks like you use the year of pub to differentiate between the two Whitley refs - but there are some that don't have the year.
Good catch
No dupe links
No dab links
External links check out OK
Image tags look fine
That's my comments complete. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 06:55, 9 January 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for the thorough review. Let me know if my changes are satisfactory.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:08, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
@Zawed: just checking you haven't forgot about this. L293D (☎ • ✎) 00:26, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
Looking good, I've queried one point though. Zawed (talk) 08:19, 14 January 2019 (UTC)
OK, passing as GA now. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 08:29, 15 January 2019 (UTC)