# Talk:Lily van Java

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 05:01, 23 August 2012 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Cheers, TBrandley 05:01, 23 August 2012 (UTC)

Infobox: Add actors per production section
Not done exactly as you suggested, but noted
Lede: film. En-dash should be em-dash after that "film"
Either is acceptable, per WP:MDASH.
Lede: "Details on its cast and performance are contradictory, although the film is recognised as the first of a long series of ethnic Chinese-produced films in the country". Any reference?
In #Release and reception, but I'll cite as well.
Lede: "It is likely lost." → "It is likely a lost film."
Done
Premise: Wow, very small. Any way of expanding?
I'll take another look, but I don't have high hopes. Pareh had the same issue.
Nothing in Biran or Said; Biran just adds "the film had a simple story and showed a lot of tennis"  and Said quotes an earlier work by Biran which says the same thing.
Production: Missing comma before "respectively"
Done.
Production: "General Motors" is missing "(GM)" at the end, as per MOS:ACRO
Not done, as the acronym is not actually used.
References: "Footnotes" and "Bibliography" should be actual sub-sections per MOS:ACCESS.
Done.
Though the article is small, because its lost, its still pretty solid. That's all above. On hold for now. TBrandley 02:21, 24 August 2012 (UTC)

OK. This article looks good. It'll pass. Congrats. TBrandley 14:02, 25 August 2012 (UTC)
Thanks for the review! — Crisco 1492 (talk) 14:06, 25 August 2012 (UTC)