# Talk:Dude Ranch (Modern Family)

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Reviewer: Basilisk4u (talk · contribs) 03:04, 6 December 2011 (UTC)
Hi!  I loved this episode, so I will review this article. Cheers!  Basilisk4u (talk) 03:04, 6 December 2011 (UTC)


### Suggestions
Lead
Citation not needed in the lead
"It featured guest stars Tim Blake Nelson as Hank and Reid Ewing as Dylan." Better to use present tense --> "'Dude Ranch' features guest stars Tim Blake Nelson as Hank and Reid Ewing as Dylan."
Plot
"Gloria's husband, Jay (Ed O'Neill), takes notice of, but Gloria doesn't notice." -->  "Gloria's husband, Jay (Ed O'Neill), takes notice, but Gloria is oblivious to his behavior."
"Meanwhile, in the Dunphy family, Dylan (Reid Ewing), Haley's boyfriend, tags along on the trip, much to Claire's chagrin, but Phil (Ty Burrell) eventually convinces her that she should try to get to know Dylan."  Break this into two sentences after "chagrin", and use "however" instead of "but".
"...and his inability to do "manly" stuff like catching and shooting."  ---> "...and his inability to participate in "manly" activities such as catching and shooting."
Mention the storyline about Phil attempting to impress Jay
Production and themes
"Near the second season, there were rumors of the producers recasting the role of Lily, and change her age from a baby to a toddler." --> "there were rumors alluding to the producers recasting the role of Lily, and changing her age from a baby to a toddler."  And what do you mean by "near" the second season?
Add that Jayden and Ella Hiller are twins, just to clarify
"The episode mainly deals with the male characters in the episode" --> "The episode mainly deals with the male characters in the show"
Reception
"The A.V. Club reviewer Donna Bowman compared the episode to the second season episode, "Halloween" and ultimately gave the episode a B+."  In what way did Bowman say the two episodes were similar?
"He eventually called it the weaker episode of the hour."  Add this sentence to the one two sentences before it - "HitFix reviewer Alan Sepinwall felt that "Dude Ranch" was the weaker episode of the hour, and commented that "Sitcom vacation episodes, as a rule, tend to not be very good. There have been exceptions[...]"Dude Ranch" was unfortunately not one of them".
It says that multiple critics praised Nolan Gould's performance, but there is only one review that talks about him in the section.  It would be good to have more reviews about him.
I think that after reading the review section, I would say that the overall consensus is "positive to mixed reviews".
Sourcing
All sources need publisher information - Entertainment Weekly is published by Time Warner.
Make sure all magazines are italicized
Source #13 is just a bare url
Overall, I think this article has potential, it just has a few issues.  I will put it on hold for seven days for the concerns to be addressed.  Nice work, and good luck!  Basilisk4u (talk) 20:06, 9 December 2011 (UTC)

I believe I've fixed all the problems, but you might want to check it over NoD'ohnuts (talk) 15:08, 11 December 2011 (UTC)


### A few more things
There are a few more remaining problems in the article that need to be addressed before I pass it.

Lead
"The episode revolves around the three families traveling to a dude ranch in the first part of the one hour season premiere." --> "Serving as the first part of the one hour season premiere, the episode revolves around the three families traveling to a dude ranch."
Plot
"She attempts to when Dylan proposes to Haley (Sarah Hyland) around the campfire one night, which causes Claire (Julie Bowen) to instantly say no for Haley, leading to Dylan running away."  This sentence is a bit odd.  I don't think she is trying to get to know him when she says no to Dylan's proposal to Haley.  I think you should mention the awkward scene between Claire and Dylan where Dylan thinks that Claire has feelings for her.
There is still no mention of Phil trying to impress Jay in this section
Reception
"Henry Hanks of CNN said the episode was equal to the first-season episode, "Hawaii"..."  How can two episodes be "equal"?
Again, there is only one review talking about Nolan Gould's performance.  In the lead, it is the only thing you mention about the what reviewers said, so there needs to be more reviews about this for it to be significant.
References
All references to magazines need publishers. Entertainment Weekly is published by Time Warner, Paste is published by Wolfgang's Vault, TV Guide is published by TV Guide Publishing Group, Inc.  Please add these.
I don't know how to add this to the reference NoD'ohnuts (talk) 23:39, 14 December 2011 (UTC)
It is added into the citations in the article.  Like how there is |work=Entertainment Weekly|, you would put |publisher=Time Warner|.  Basilisk4u (talk) 01:37, 15 December 2011 (UTC)
All magazines need to be italicized.
I will pass the article once these problems have been addressed.  Good luck!  Basilisk4u (talk) 19:52, 11 December 2011 (UTC)
DONE! NoD'ohnuts (talk) 00:19, 17 December 2011 (UTC)

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