# Talk:Edemariam Tsega

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Nominator: FuzzyMagma (talk · contribs) 20:22, 9 December 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: An anonymous username, not my real name (talk · contribs) 21:34, 11 February 2025 (UTC)
I'll review this. — Anonymous 21:34, 11 February 2025 (UTC)

@An anonymous username, not my real name thanks for taking the time to review the page. I will try to fix ASAP but these days I have couple of deadlines coming soon and I would appreciate couple of days (beyond the 7 days) to fix the page and reply properly to your questions. FuzzyMagma (talk) 22:23, 15 February 2025 (UTC)
That's fine. Also, I would be happy to help with some of the grammatical issues if you are unsure of what the problems are. — Anonymous 02:50, 16 February 2025 (UTC)
I generally try to avoid quickfailing articles, and this one is no exception. However, it is quite a long way from being ready, unfortunately. There are significant grammatical errors and sourcing issues.

A hatnote about Ethiopian naming conventions would be very helpful. See Hayle Ibrahimov and Habte Giyorgis Dinagde.
fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
The infobox says he had Canadian citizenship, but him receiving it is never mentioned in the body.
removed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Linking Ethiopian in the lead is OVERLINK.
removed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
I seeing the word "practiced", but this article generally seems to follow UK spelling conventions, where "practised" would be the correct form of the verb.
fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Teshale or Teshalé? There is inconsistency here.
fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Titles such as "fellow", "medical director", "internist", "professor", and "professor emeritus" do not need to be capitalized midsentence. See MOS:TITLE. I also see the stray capitalization of "gastroenterology" and "virology".
fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
He was trained as physicians earning degrees from the Addis Ababa University (AAU), McGill University, the London School of Hygiene and Tropical Medicine, and later Lund University. Multiple grammatical issues here. Even if they were fixed, I'm not sure if having a list of every university he studied at is helpful.
removed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Ref 3 does not appear to support the claims about his mother's birth and death dates.
sorry I put the source as the book review when it should have been the book itself, and it should have been 1916 (not 19190. Now fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 16:03, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
He then travelled to the UK to study and graduate from London School of Hygiene and Tropical Medicine in 1969. Not grammatically correct; I suggesting rewording to "He then travelled to the UK to study, graduating from London School of Hygiene and Tropical Medicine in 1969."
fixed
making him the first Ethiopian to achieve that. To achieve what, exactly?
rephrased FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
For 23 years, Tsega worked as an internist and gastroenterologist conducting clinical research with grants from Swedish Development Cooperation Agency, Department for Research and Addis Ababa University with a focus on viral hepatitis, acute and chronic liver disease. This sentence is extremely long and has some grammatical errors. I also could not verify the claim about his reception of a grant from the Swedish International Development Cooperation Agency (which I think should be wikilinked). Is it verified in ref 9 (I cannot access it)?
in ref 9 (and 10) it is mentioned in the acknowledgments section: "This study was financially supported by a grant from the Swedish Agency for Research Cooperation with Developing Countries (SAREC) through the Science and Technology Commission of Ethiopia and the Research and Publication Office of Addis Ababa University." FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:59, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
"Returning to Ethiopia" and "Moving to Canada" should more properly be "Return to Ethiopia" and "Move to Canada", respectively (drop the -ing). However, I'm not sure whether dividing the section into these subsections is actually necessary to begin with.
fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:31, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Tsega was married in 1972 "Married", not "was married".
fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Goodreads, slideshare.net, and YouTube are not reliable sources.
Goodreads and slideshare.net are used to verify the existence of the books. I found a better source than the YouTube one FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:41, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Upon closer inspection, it looks like the slideshare.net source is just a scanned copy of the book (I'm not sure if the person who uploaded it had permission, but I don't think that's our problem), in which case the book is the actual source.
I also see that ref 2 seems to be trying to cite the book itself, but it currently cites a website selling the book.
Addis Ababa University is linked more than once, and the abbreviation AAU is defined on its second usage rather than its first. Additionally, since it's defined, the abbreviation template in the last section should be unnecessary.
fixed FuzzyMagma (talk) 15:28, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
All that said, don't get discouraged. I have faith that you can work through these issues. The article will be put on hold for now. — Anonymous 00:36, 12 February 2025 (UTC)

@An anonymous username, not my real name Thanks again for taking the time to review the article. I have now amended per recommendations. Please feel free to reply to each fix above. FuzzyMagma (talk) 16:13, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
fix the book problem above FuzzyMagma (talk) 20:07, 23 February 2025 (UTC)
Actually, we may still have a problem. I highly suspect a copyright violation on the part of whoever uploaded the book to slideshare.net, and WP:COPYVIOEL has this to say about such links: material that violates the copyrights of others per contributors' rights and obligations should not be linked, whether in an external-links section or in a citation. External links to websites that display copyrighted works are acceptable as long as the website is manifestly run, maintained or owned by the copyright owner; the owner has licensed the content in a way that allows the website to use it; or the website uses the work in a way compliant with fair use. Knowingly directing others to material that violates copyright might be considered contributory copyright infringement. If there is reason to believe that a website has a copy of a work in violation of its copyright, do not link to it. Linking to a page that illegally distributes someone else's work casts a bad light on Wikipedia and its editors. Could you cite the book without using the link at all? Finally, I think the link to the YouTube video should be removed from the external links section, as it could misleadingly suggest that the video was uploaded by a reputable source (it wasn't, as far as I can tell). — Anonymous 03:24, 25 February 2025 (UTC)
Removed the slideshare link as there is another source, Addis Ababa University Press which should be enough. Also removed external link, although the video is sort of a short version of this page but with pictures. Anyway it’s better to avoid it FuzzyMagma (talk) 06:39, 25 February 2025 (UTC)
@An anonymous username, not my real name I have shorten the sentence and it’s actually ref 6 not 4. Sorry for that. FuzzyMagma (talk) 07:47, 27 February 2025 (UTC)
One more thing I noticed: He also taught resident students and doctors clinical medicine, endoscopic and laparoscopic. The wording here is confusing and I don't see anything like it mentioned at the source.
Actually, the issue wasn't with the part you removed, but rather some missing words (endoscopic and laparoscopic are adjectives, meaning they need a noun to attach to, which in this case was "skills"). I think the article is ready to pass now. — Anonymous 23:51, 28 February 2025 (UTC)

Thanks again for your time and helping me in improving the page. See you around FuzzyMagma (talk) 10:42, 1 March 2025 (UTC)