# Talk:HMS Llewellyn (1913)

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 08:47, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
I will review, comments to follow in next few days. Zawed (talk) 08:47, 16 April 2021 (UTC)
Infobox

In the builder field, should recite the name in full. The way it is presented at the moment, it looks like it is part of a location.
Done.
Design

105 long tons... starting a sentence with a number should be avoided. Zawed (talk) 10:57, 19 April 2021 (UTC)
Done.
24 hours during testing.?
Done.
Why is quote marks used around pom pom in the infobox but not in the text?
Different sources have both, but I have changed the text for consistency.
Construction

...the 1912–1913 Programme...: probably need more context for the Programme
Done.
River Clyde mentioned here, but Clydebank in the infobox.
Reference to Clydebank removed as unnecessary.
Originally laid down as Picton, Llewellyn was renamed... since you have already established the original in the previous sentence, perhaps reword. May be: "The ship was renamed Llewellyn by Admiralty order on 30 September 1913,..."
Done
...the first alphabetical class of the Navy... perhaps a bit more context here? I've read a few RN ship articles but this is the first I've heard of the alphabetical class.
Clarified and expanded.
On the The following day...
Done.
After returning to service,.... This implies she may have been damaged or refitted?
Clarified.
escortinged troop convoys to France
Done.
one of which struck the destroyer.  need to mention that the bow was damaged as mentioned in the lead.
Done
without additional casualties. this would imply some casualties due to the torpedo strike?
Clarified.
Bibliography

Monograph No. 35 listed but not cited?
Removed.
Wrong dash style for the pg range in Newbolt.
Fixed.
Other stuff

No dupe links
Image tags check out OK.
That's my initial pass done. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:57, 19 April 2021 (UTC)

@Zawed: Thank you for the review. Please check through my changes and tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 14:44, 21 April 2021 (UTC)
Looks good, I made one small edit. Passing as GA as I consider that this meets the necessary criteria. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:22, 23 April 2021 (UTC)