# Talk:Fire Emblem: New Mystery of the Emblem

"Fire Emblem: New Mystery of the Emblem" without ": Heroes of Light and Shadow" appears to be the common name for this game based on its usage in the English sources already included in the article (also a better fit for the naming criteria/article titles policy). Wanted to just confirm first.  czar 18:31, 16 July 2016 (UTC)

@Czar: I looked through the sources myself while I was writing the article, and its most common referenced English title was the one I called the title, or its romaji version. That's why I didn't use "New Mystery of the Emblem", but instead went with the full subtitle. --ProtoDrake (talk) 19:11, 16 July 2016 (UTC)
I looked through the sources too. While the romaji version was common, we prefer the English version when one exists, and with regard to that, both Pocket Gamer and the post-release andriasang articles appear to prefer the shorter name. But even still, we go back to the aforementioned naming criteria: which is the more recognizable (the name most people will call it), natural (reflecting what it's usually called), precise (unambiguously identified), and concise (not longer than necessary to identify), per the naming criteria (article titles policy)? "Fire Emblem: New Mystery of the Emblem" suffices, though "Heroes of Light and Shadow" can/should be included in the lede as its official title. Thoughts? czar 19:21, 16 July 2016 (UTC)
@Czar: Sorted. --ProtoDrake (talk) 20:02, 16 July 2016 (UTC)
Nice work, by the way! Do you read Japanese? czar 20:10, 16 July 2016 (UTC)

Not very well, I have to say. I know some phrases, but I mostly find other translations or summaries online, or for online resources do my own translations with a combination of Google Translate, and my own manual research into various terms and phrases that stump that software. --ProtoDrake (talk) 20:17, 16 July 2016 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Fire Emblem: New Mystery of the Emblem/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: IDV (talk · contribs) 15:37, 20 July 2016 (UTC)
I'll be doing this one.--IDVtalk 15:37, 20 July 2016 (UTC)
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### Lead/infobox
The footnote says that it is considered the twelfth or the thirteenth by different sources, yet the text in the lead only says it is the twelfth. Is there a reason for favoring this? I'd probably skip the numbering entirely in the lead's text and just go "It is part of the Fire Emblem series[b]"
In addition, the game adapts [...] four additional story episodes - I'd probably reword it to not use addition(al) twice in the same sentence
Preparations for New Mystery of the Emblem began during development of the first game's 2008 DS remake, using the original Mystery of the Emblem as a starting point for their development. - I would specify that "the first game" refers to Fire Emblem: Shadow Dragon and the Blade of Light, perhaps by linking to it like [[Fire Emblem: Shadow Dragon and the Blade of Light|the first ''Fire Emblem'' game's]]
The sentence also seems unclear: "using the original Mystery of the Emblem as a starting point for their development" - what does this mean, exactly? Was MotE used as a starting point for both remakes? Please reword it to be clearer.
co-director and writer Kouhei Maeda -  Why not mention the other director as well?
units defeated in missions were revived are revived
link permanent death to Permadeath
It would be good to mention when The Binding Blade came out so we can get some perspective on how long ago it had been.
I suggest making full use of the fair-use cover image and identify characters depicted on it - I suggest adding a caption like "Cover art, featuring the characters [character name] and [character name]"


### Gameplay
Fire Emblem: New Mystery of the Emblem: Heroes of Light and Shadow is a - that's a mouthful. Because the title is so long, I think it'd be all right to just refer to it as New Mystery of the Emblem after the first mention in the lead.
Link class to Character class
Maybe I'm in the wrong here since English isn't my first language, but "stats" sounds kind of jargon-y to me. This appears multiple times in the article.
Players can save at the end of each chapter, or during battles. Does this mean the player can save at any time? Because if so, it's simpler to say just that.
You should link Marth on the first mention after the lead (and unlink his name in the synopsis section further down)
I wouldn't necessarily say that lances are stronger than swords - "strong against" is probably more accurate
"level up" also feels jargon-y - I'd change it to something like "their experience level increases"
these classes, when at level 10, can be promoted using a Master Seal - What does this mean?
single-playing should probably be "single-player"
The game is played should probably be "can be played" as it's an option


### Synopsis
a land also featured in the first Fire Emblem title Fire Emblem: Shadow Dragon and the Blade of Light. You don't need the Fire Emblem supertitle - just the subtitle will do, and is shorter. Also, I think there should be a comma following "the first Fire Emblem title"
the land was threatened by the dark sorcerer Gharnef, who summons the dark dragon Medeus into the world. - You switch from past to present tense. Is the summoning something that happens in NMotE, or is it part of the backstory?
After becoming a fugitive from his kingdom after an attack on his kingdom, Archanean prince Marth goes on a quest to - Goes on a quest to what? Also, "his kingdom, his kingdom".
In the story of Mystery of the Emblem, Marth's old ally Hardin has ascended the throne, but begins expanding the military and dominating the other regions of Archanea. What, so does this not happen in NMotE, just the original? If it happens in NMotE too, I don't understand why it says "In the story of Mystery of the Emblem". If it does not happen in NMotE, it shouldn't be mentioned here at all, I think.
In New Mystery of the Emblem, the story remains unchanged, but Marth runs into the Avatar and takes them with him on his adventures. - I feel like this should be the first thing mentioned in the synopsis section.


### Development
Fire Emblem: Shadow Dragon the 2008 DS remake of Shadow Dragon and the Blade of Light. - there should be a comma following "Fire Emblem: Shadow Dragon"
but they decided - you have not yet specified who this "they" is, so you need to change it to "the developers" or something similar
they could not make New Mystery of the Emblem using the systems of Shadow Dragon, using the original Mystery of the Emblem as a starting point. - is this meant to say "so they instead used the original Mystery of the Emblem as a starting point"?
Add what year Genealogy came out, so we get some perspective - this is a discussion dating way back to 1996, not just something that has been discussed for a few years
20th Anniversary - is there a reason this isn't written "20th anniversary" or "twentieth anniversary"?


### Reception
remove the extra space in " far more than


### References/Notes
There's currently a thread at the WPVG's sources page about Cubed3, and it doesn't seem like it is a usable source. I don't know how much the gameplay section relies on this, so that might be a problem unless you find a replacement, but you should just be able to remove the Cubed3 parts from the reception section without too much of a loss.
I don't know if this is just up to preference, so I won't fail the review for it or anything, but it makes more sense to me to have the informational footnote list above the reference list, especially as the notes make use of references.


### Comments/discussion
Looking pretty good. The biggest issue is the use of Cubed3; additionally, there are some prose issues, but they should be easy to take care of. I'll put this  On hold for a week; if everything is fixed/addressed by then, I'll pass the article.--IDVtalk 13:41, 21 July 2016 (UTC)

@IDV: Addressed most of the points you raised. But I will explain the footnote. The reason I put it in there is because of BS Fire Emblem, which is alternately shown as either part of the series as a whole or just a spin-off not counted in official lists. This affects how the titles are numbered, as the remakes are considered official titles.  I've been treating BS as if it's not an official part, but still acknolweding that there is discrepancy over exact numbering (with sources to back it up). In addition, I've been using the footnote rather than another user's style, which was "12th entry (13th overall)", as it gives a chance for commentary and keeps the lead tidy. --ProtoDrake (talk) 15:20, 21 July 2016 (UTC)
All right, fair enough. I would have liked to see the remaining points I brought up addressed, but looking over the article and your changes, I don't think they're big enough issues to stand in the way of a GA promotion, so I'll  Pass the article.--IDVtalk 22:28, 21 July 2016 (UTC)