# Talk:Iced Out Audemars

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 10:52, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

I will review this soon, per your request... a bit ironic since I originally nominated it for deletion. --K. Peake 10:52, 19 March 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
Infobox looks good!
The remix release sentence should be swapped with the drill and lyrics sentence for the correct order; you can have the final para dedicated to the remix
"A remix that" → "A remix of the song that"
"Musically a drill track, the lyrics" → "A drill track, the lyrics"
"finer things in life and expressing their love for Dior and" → "finer things and expressing their love for Dior, among"
Remove the chorus and outro parts, as this is too specific for the lead


### Background and release
"known their real names" → "known under their respective real names of"
"Khadafi Julio. It was written alongside" → "Khadafi Julio, alongside"
Remove repetition of Khadafi Julio under writing credits
Why is the additional producer not mentioned here and in the lead? Bare in mind, it's not like the infobox where you can't add them.
"debut deluxe studio album," → "debut studio album"
Remove release year in brackets, as it is specified later on in the sentence
Introduce Lil Wayne as being a rapper


### Music and lyrics
"during the chorus" → "during both the chorus" with the pipe
"He pays homage to" → "Lil Wayne pays homage to" but this should start a new para in the section, as it and the following sentences total up to four
"we gone tomorrow"." → "we gone tomorrow."" per MOS:QUOTE on full quotes
Pipe Wu-Tang to Wu-Tang Clan
Pipe pitched to Pitch (music)


### Critical reception
"[Pop Smoke]] would" → "[Pop Smoke] would"
"Complex's Jessica McKinney opined that" → "McKinney opined that"
"while The Fader's Jordan Darville wrote that Lil Wayne added" → "while Darville wrote the rapper contributes" to avoid overusing his stage name
"Jon Powell for Revolt commented that Lil Wayne" → "Jon Powell, for Revolt, commented that he"
"and said "New York's" → "and said that "New York's"


### Credits and personnel
Pipe Bashar Jackson to Pop Smoke
Swap featured artist and songwriter
Swap songwriting and programming


### References
Copyvio score looks very good at 23.7%!
Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
HypeBeast → Hypebeast on ref 12


### Final comments and verdict
 On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 14:16, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
Kyle Peake thanks a lot for the review. Only a few more articles to go! The Ultimate Boss (talk) 20:44, 19 March 2021 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss  Pass now and there were some mistakes but they were not the changes themselves being missed so I copyedited the fixes in, plus good luck with the GT! --K. Peake 21:57, 19 March 2021 (UTC)