# Talk:Nejishiki

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Nominator: Plifal (talk · contribs) 14:08, 31 August 2025 (UTC)
Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 17:53, 7 September 2025 (UTC)

I will be reviewing this article. I'll use a ping once I see any issue that needs to be solved. Cheers.Tintor2 (talk) 17:53, 7 September 2025 (UTC)
@Plifal: I gave it a good read it and enjoyed. Everything seems well written and organized. There are some doubts I have:

Is the romaji from hepburn necessary? It's the same title.
i suppose not, i just include it by default.--Plifal (talk) 10:04, 8 September 2025 (UTC)
Is there a need to credit Yoshiharu Tsuge twice in the infobox? I guess this type credit is common if it is a remake of another work like Mappa's take on Dororo.
didn't catch that! deleted the "written by" credit, although maybe the reverse should be the case.--Plifal (talk) 10:04, 8 September 2025 (UTC)
In general, some authors seems to called for their last name first rather than the Western style Wikipedia uses like Mamoru Oshii being called Oshii Mamoru.
throughout the article i've used japanese name order. per WP:JTITLE i've followed the naming convention established by holmberg, kinsella, suzuki, and camacho lópez that default to tsuge yoshiharu. other authors on his manga also use this name order (tom gill and igarashi yoshikuni) instances of other people's names have been kept for consistency and always linked to their article page to prevent confusion.--Plifal (talk) 10:05, 8 September 2025 (UTC)
The nonfree image doesn't seem to be that useful
well, i thought it apt to use it because it is often reproduced in discussions of the manga's themes, and showcases almost everything that is talked about (which can be viewed in the alt text); including tsuge's approach to existential horror, the countryside setting, industrialisation, the photorealistic montage combined with cartoonish character images etc. something i don't think the cover image captures. but if you think it should be removed then i won't push it.--Plifal (talk) 10:04, 8 September 2025 (UTC)
The quote box doesn't add much. I suggest using the free image of the author instead with a shorter commentary.
i'd prefer to keep this, because i think we get a better sense of the development of his thought about the manga's creation. the dream narrative is often brought up in subsequent discussions, but here we have tsuge not even mentioning this aspect only a couple of months after initial publication.--Plifal (talk) 10:04, 8 September 2025 (UTC)
That is all. It's me nitpicking. If you believe some parts are worth keeping, reply to me. Remember to ping me. Cheers.Tintor2 (talk) 19:10, 7 September 2025 (UTC)

Tintor2 thank you kindly for taking this on! i appreciate your review!! please let me know if there's anything i can do to assist you!!!--Plifal (talk) 10:04, 8 September 2025 (UTC)
Passed the review. If you ever consider the idea of the FA nomination I suggest looking to make sources more accessible like an archive of the books. Good work. Tintor2 (talk) 19:05, 8 September 2025 (UTC)

'This sweet-maker he accuses of being his mother from before he was born.'
Huh? Why would that be an accusation? And if someone is your mother, how can she not be your 'mother from before you are born'? Humans always spend some time in the womb before being born. This seems like a tautology. ~2025-31121-91 (talk) 11:21, 4 November 2025 (UTC)

it's an avant-garde manga, the story itself does not follow any particular logic. i urge you to read it, and if you have a better suggestion for phrasing please do share! :) --Plifal (talk) 11:31, 4 November 2025 (UTC)
Well, 'avant-garde' does not by definition mean 'nonsensical'. To my shame, I have to admit that I do not read Japanese. By all means, if the text literally says nothing but something like 'Oh you bad woman, you were my mother before I was born!' and nothing in the context makes it make sense, then clearly there is no way to improve the article either (except perhaps to add quotation marks to the puzzling phrase 'she was his mother before he was born' so as to make clear that this puzzling phrase really is the author's and not a distortion introduced by the retelling). I just assumed that it might make more sense in the original and that the retelling is what makes it (more) nonsensical, because that is often the case.--~2025-31121-91 (talk) 03:49, 5 November 2025 (UTC)