# Talk:Deus Ex: Human Revolution – The Missing Link

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Reviewer: Niwi3 (talk · contribs) 12:09, 22 August 2016 (UTC)
Hi, I will review this soon. --Niwi3 (talk) 12:09, 22 August 2016 (UTC)


### Lead
"...is a standalone downloadable episode set within the 2011 cyberpunk-themed" - In my opinion, "...is a standalone downloadable episode for the 2011 cyberpunk-themed..." is better and less confusing. Also, it is already stated in the second paragraph that the DLC is set during the events of the base game, so no need to repeat.
"it released digitally worldwide in October 2011 for..." -> "it was released digitally worldwide in October 2011 for..."
In the second paragraph, first-person and stealth should be wikilinked.
"Initially unplanned, The Missing Link was developed by the core staff when the visual theme of Human Revolution had been finalized. The game's core staff returned, including producer David Anfossi, director Jean-François Dugas, writer Mary DeMarle, and composer Michael McCann." - This needs to be simplified since you repeat the fact that the core team returned. Try the following: "Initially unplanned, The Missing Link was developed by Human Revolution″s core staff, including producer David Anfossi, director Jean-François Dugas, writer Mary DeMarle, and composer  Michael McCann."
"The boss battle was designed to allow for multiple solutions, in contrast to the limited action-based approaches of the main game's boss fights." -> "A boss battle was designed to allow for multiple solutions, in contrast to the limited action-based approaches of the main game's boss fights."


### Gameplay
"Like the main game, The Missing Link is played from a first-person perspective" - first-person should be wikilinked.
"The style in which the player can navigate environments nad overcome obstacles is relatively open" -> "The style in which the player can navigate environments and overcome obstacles is relatively open"
"or use stealth to remain hidden" -> "or use stealth to progress through the game undetected"
"The environments include security devices such as lasers and cameras, and ." -> "The environments include security devices like lasers and cameras."


### Synopsis
Section name should be renamed to "Plot". The term "Synopsis" is usually used if it includes characters and setting subsections. Not a big issue, though.
"The Missing Link is set within the plot of Human Revolution" - In my opinion, "The Missing Link takes place during the events of Human Revolution" is less confusing and sounds better.
The second paragraph needs a full stop at the end


### Development
"The story was designed so it would not spoil the events of the main narrative" - "The story was designed so that it would not spoil the events of the main narrative"
"The DLC was made a stand-alone experience" -> "The DLC was developed as stand-alone experience"
"Due to the relatively small size of the DLC environment, they did not need to focus on a raised concern in the main game about repeating character faces and voices." -> "Due to the relatively small size of the DLC environment, developers did not need to focus on a raised concern in the main game about repeating character faces and voices."
In the third paragraph, Eidos Montreal should be wikilinked


### Release
"Plans for DLC was first announced in 2010 at that year's Gamescom event..." -> "Plans for a DLC were first announced in 2010 at that year's Gamescom event..."
"...where it was announced that it would be an extension to the main narrative." - I would replace the word "announced" with "stated" to avoid repetition
"...eventually revealing the DLC in September, the month after the main game's release." - Simplify: "...eventually revealing the DLC one month after the main game's release."
"The Missing Link released on October 18, 2011 for Microsoft Windows personal computers (PC) through Steam and Xbox Live for Xbox 360, and October 19 on PlayStation Network (PSN) for PlayStation 3." -> "The Missing Link was released on October 18, 2011 on Steam for Microsoft Windows personal computers (PC), Xbox Live for Xbox 360, and October 19 on PlayStation Network (PSN) for PlayStation 3."
"In Japan, the console versions of the DLC released on March 7, 2012 for PSN and March 20 for Xbox Live." -> "In Japan, the console versions of the DLC were released on March 7, 2012 for PSN and March 20 for Xbox Live."
In the second paragraph, port should be wikilinked
"was later included with the main game's other additional content with the director's cut" -> "was subsequently included with other additional content in the director's cut edition of the base game"
"The director's cut released on October 25, 2013 for PC, Xbox 360, PS3 and Wii U. An OS X port, again handled by Feral Interactive, released on April 16, 2014." - Again, "The director's cut was released on October 25, 2013 for PC, Xbox 360, PS3 and Wii U. An OS X port, again handled by Feral Interactive, was released on April 16, 2014."


### Reception
In the first paragraph, "The Missing Release" should be "The Missing Link"
No need to repeat Metacritic scores in the prose as it makes the reading extremely boring. You can delete the first paragraph and start the second one like this: "The Missing Link received generally positive reviews from critics. Destructoid's Maurice Tan enjoyed..."
"Destructoid's Maurice Tan enjoyed the story despite it not adding anything to the overall experience of Human Revolution and noting that the major choices lacked impact." -> "Destructoid's Maurice Tan enjoyed the story despite it not adding anything to the overall experience of Human Revolution and noted that the major choices lacked impact."
"VanOrd's positive opinion on the gameplay was shared with that of Human Revolution, in addition to praising the concluding boss fight, but felt the experience was bogged down with excessive backtracking through environments." - too long. Try this: "VanOrd's positive opinion on the gameplay was shared with that of Human Revolution. He also praised the concluding boss fight, but felt that the experience was bogged down with excessive backtracking through environments."
"...for the boss fight, and like other reviewers criticized the amount..." -> "...for the boss fight and, like other reviewers, criticized the amount..."

Overall, a fairly solid article with a few issues that are very easy to fix. Once they have been addressed, the article should be good to go. Regards --Niwi3 (talk) 20:50, 22 August 2016 (UTC)

@Niwi3: All sorted, I think. Please point out anything I missed. --ProtoDrake (talk) 21:12, 22 August 2016 (UTC)
Made some small adjustments. I'm happy with the article now, so this is a pass. Good work --Niwi3 (talk) 21:39, 22 August 2016 (UTC)