# Talk:Daju kingdom

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 21:15, 21 March 2018 (UTC)


### Criteria
### Review
Well-written:

Verifiable with no original research:

Broad in its coverage:

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.

Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:


#### Result
#### Discussion
I have done some light copy editing. Feel free to revert anything you don't agree with, or query here anything you don't understand my reasons for.
Prose.

"the ruling ethnicity." This seems a little clumsy. Perhaps "the ruling ethnic group" or similar?
"Since the 12th century they were mentioned by a couple of contemporary Arab historians."... a couple of..." is not very encyclopedic. Maybe "two"? Or "several" or "a limited number of".
" waged war against an unidentified people named Watkhu". If they are named then they are identified. Possibly "against an otherwise unknown people named the Watkhu"?
References.

When a citation covers 2 or more pages could you replace "p." with "pp.". Gog the Mild (talk) 22:11, 21 March 2018 (UTC)


### Additional notes
 Gog the Mild (talk) 21:15, 21 March 2018 (UTC)