# Talk:Not flash, just Gordon

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Reviewer: Llewee (talk · contribs) 10:37, 27 December 2022 (UTC)

Hi ThatRandomGuy1, I'm going to be reviewing this article. I'll point out a few immediate issues to begin with.

Their is an excessive number of short unattributed quotes. Ensure all quotes are attributed (e.g According to a BBC report of the time...) or use own words.
Their is a slight issue with the neutrality of the article. The article takes certain assumptions about Brown's personality as a given which may have been the mainstream view of the period but are opinion. You don't need to add counterarguments or anything like that but try to make clear through wording that the idea he was uncharismatic was a widely held perception not necessarily gospel truth.
The Saatchi & Saatchi  section needs clarifying. It states that MS Saatchi separated from Saatchi & Saatchi in the 1990s. Did the companies remerge by 2008 or did the original company cease to exist?
"which affects the constitutional foundations of the European Union.[71]" - change this to past tense
--Llewee (talk) 10:37, 27 December 2022 (UTC)

I've replaced most of the quotes with my own words but retained "famous" in the Saatchi & Saatchi section in scare quotes as it could be viewed as unneutral. I also attributed the "Brown strength" and "Cameron weakness" quotes in the Campaign section to their source.
I've added perceived, viewed as, etc to describe these assumptions e.g. "Brown was known for his perceived awkward persona" and "Brown was viewed as having limited communication skills". Also did this for Blair and Cameron e.g. "Blair was known for his perceived charismatic personality" and "David Cameron was young and, like Blair, also viewed as charismatic".
I've added information to the Saatchi & Saatchi section for clarification.
Changed to past tense.
ThatRandomGuy1 (talk) 15:06, 27 December 2022 (UTC)