# Talk:Jim Cullivan

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 08:47, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Notes
Added guards, us army ww2, uni of indiana and appalachian uni faculty cats
Grove High Schhol isn't linked but is this it or no?
Looks like it - linked.
Spell our and link us army.
Done.
"returned to his alma mater" Given that his prev coaching job was at a high school it is not obvious that "alma mater" refers to murray state so i suggest just saying alma mater murray state or something.
Changed.
"When Murray State head coach" once you adjust the previous sentence, remove murray state from this
Done.
"Grove High School, where he attended from 1938–1941" early lif section didn't say that. Suggeest moving it there removing it from the coaching section
Not sure where I got that - removed the dates as I can't find the source.
"While there he" comma after there
Added.
"undefeated years, and seven" remove comma
Done.
"He coached them for one year, and retired" remove comma
Done.
any more info on his UPFL stint?
Didn't find any - league seems pretty obscure.
"being named assistant at Fulton High School in Kentucky" add in 1949
Done.
"was signed by Grove High School" in 1966
Done.
"Guilford Quakers as defensive line coach" in 1978
Done.
Some of the high schools he coached don't have articles so i dont know where they are.
Would you like me to try to find their locations?
if it's not too much work WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:26, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
Added them. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:46, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
in the lead, "coaching career that spanned over 40 seasons" thats not true
1949-1990 is 42 seasons, right?
there are a few gaps i think. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:24, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: That's right, but I'm saying it spanned over 40 years, not that he coached all 40. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:46, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
ok, can you change seasons to years WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:48, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: Changed. BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:49, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
I think that's all. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 08:47, 22 October 2023 (UTC)

@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 02:17, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
Everything is done except the following: "He coached them for one year and retired in 1991 at the age of 71, after a brief stint in the United Professional Football League (UPFL)." I dont see in the source where it says he retired in 1991? Also where did u get 1990 from for UPFL in the infobox? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 05:55, 27 October 2023 (UTC)

@WikiOriginal-9: Changed it to Cullivan left the school in 1989 to become an assistant coach for Tennessee Wesleyan. After a stint with them, he had a short stay with a team in the United Professional Football League (UPFL) before retiring. I also put "c. 1990" in the infobox as it was probably around that time - I can remove it if you want. BeanieFan11 (talk) 15:55, 27 October 2023 (UTC)
All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work! WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 16:35, 27 October 2023 (UTC)