# Talk:Emily Sartain

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 23:25, 31 January 2015 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman 23:25, 31 January 2015 (UTC)
Here are the issues I found:

Cite the traveling part of the early life section.
That block of text all came from the same source, so I just added inline citations at the sentence level.--CaroleHenson (talk) 04:25, 3 February 2015 (UTC)
"Sartain worked as art editor for the paper, Our Continent from" rm comma
 Done--CaroleHenson (talk) 04:25, 3 February 2015 (UTC)
"She trained women who taught art to young children or up to the university level." written awkwardly, reword.
Yep, good point. It seems to be better to just remove "to young children..." and keep it simple.--CaroleHenson (talk) 04:25, 3 February 2015 (UTC)
I'll put the article on hold and will pass when fixed. Wizardman 23:57, 2 February 2015 (UTC)

Thanks so much, Wizardman. The changes are  Done.--CaroleHenson (talk) 04:25, 3 February 2015 (UTC)
Everything looks good now, so I'll pass the article. Wizardman 15:12, 7 February 2015 (UTC)
Excellent, thanks!--CaroleHenson (talk) 16:16, 7 February 2015 (UTC)

...first woman in Europe and the United States to practice the art of mezzotint engraving.

This implies that women elsewhere in the world were practising mezzotint. If so, it would be interesting to know where. If not, we don't need to specify 'Europe and the United States'.Valetude (talk) 22:55, 19 January 2021 (UTC)