# Talk:Gordon McClymont

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Reviewer: Curly Turkey (talk · contribs) 05:31, 5 June 2013 (UTC)
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose quality: 
Nicely written.  Only a couple of hairsplits:
"From 1947 to 1949, he attended the University of Cambridge under a Walter and Eliza Hall Veterinary Research Fellowship, from which he earned a doctor of philosophy."  Did he earn the degree from Cambridge, or from the Walter and Eliza Hall Veterinary Research Fellowship?
Cambridge. Cla68 (talk) 10:26, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"pregnancy toxaemia" is pretty obscure to the general reader.  Might want to link it (to Pre-eclampsia?)
[1] Cla68 (talk) 10:28, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"For example, as an undergraduate, he had received": I don't think the past perfect is correct here.
[2] Cla68 (talk) 10:40, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
link New England University College (to University of New England (Australia)?)
[3] Cla68 (talk) 10:47, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"pointed-out" drop the hyphen
[4] Cla68 (talk) 10:50, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"The impact of the resulting improvements in Australia's livestock production were".  "The impact" is the subject, so this should be "was" and not "were"
[5] Cla68 (talk) 10:52, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"One hundred-sixty graduated with honors." Only numbers from 21 to 99 are hyphenated.  Also, is "honors" not spelled "honours" in Australian English?
[6] [7] Cla68 (talk) 10:54, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
I still count seven instances of "honor" in the article (I believe "honorary" is spelt without a "u", though). Curly Turkey (gobble) 03:47, 11 June 2013 (UTC)
I think I got the rest. Cla68 (talk) 13:14, 13 June 2013 (UTC)
Ditto with "center", "centre"?  I'm not an expert in Australian spelling.
[8] Cla68 (talk) 10:59, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"Professor R.B. Cumming" space between "R." and "B."
Done. Cla68 (talk) 11:01, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"widely recognized-and acclaimed-as"  I can't access the source, but I suspect these are emdashes or spaced endashes
[9] Cla68 (talk) 11:13, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
"J.S. Ryan" (in Personality section) space "J." and "S."
Done. Cla68 (talk) 11:15, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
Is the "University of New England" University of New England (Australia)?
Yes.  Linked in the article. Cla68 (talk) 11:15, 10 June 2013 (UTC)
B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists: 

Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section: 

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: 
Everything's duly reffed with inline cites, but there are some inconsistencies in the cites:
cite 40: Who or what is "RT"?
Fixed. Cla68 (talk) 12:21, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
cite 49: Which Ryan is this?
Fixed. Cla68 (talk) 12:24, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
For consistency's sake, if you are going to date the Ryan cites, it's probably best to date the Leng, Jordan, etc. ones, too.
Done. Cla68 (talk) 12:35, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
Leng should be Leng & McClymont, shouldn't it?
Done. Cla68 (talk) 12:42, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
In the "References" section, if Leng is surname first, then so should McClymont be.  Ditto Warren Newman.
Done. Cla68 (talk) 12:45, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
Everything looks fine to me now. Curly Turkey (gobble) 23:12, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
C. No original research: 
As far as I can tell.  I can't access all of the sources.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects: 
As far as I'm aware
B. Focused: 
The article seems to get to the point very well.
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias: 
I'm not an expert on the subject, but I can detect no obvious bias.
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc: 

Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: 

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: 
No images at all.  Are there no pictures of the man that could be used with a Fair Use Rationale?  No photos of the university?
I added a photo of the university and of one of his awards.  I don't have any photos of him that are decent enough quality to upload under a fair use license and I haven't found any public domain images.  I'm still looking but it may take awhile. Cla68 (talk) 12:47, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
The images look fine, and the licences check out.  If you're planning on taking this article farther I'd recommend adding WP:ALTTEXT to the images. Curly Turkey (gobble) 23:12, 25 June 2013 (UTC)
Overall:
Pass or Fail: 

I have fixed some of your suggestions. This is the first time I have seen the article and thought I would help out. Michael73072 (talk) 04:42, 10 June 2013 (UTC)

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