# Talk:Joe Hall (American football)

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 06:32, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (No original research):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Notes
Added the Commons cat
Where did you get Jr from in his name?
I was thinking that if his son was Joe Hall III, then he would have had to have been Jr. – but I just noticed that his personal website is "joehalljr.com" so that confirms it.
How did you come up with the weight range in the infobox? PFA says 300. That seems reasonable.
I think I was taking the lowest he weighed during his career and the highest, but I changed it to 300.
If we're breaking up the colleges in the infobox on two separate lines, we might as well add the years to each college
Done.
"Weighing 265 pounds by high school" I don't see where in that clipping it says 265 lbs
"He played tailback and power forward at 265 pounds in high school"
That's not the ref that is cited in the article. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 17:43, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
The source is: Whitlock, Jason (July 23, 2003). "It's hard to ignore Joe Hall". The Kansas City Star. p. 77, 82 – via Newspapers.com.  – after p. 77, you have to click on the link that says 82. BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:14, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
"at Artesia HS" spell out high school
Done.
Change to first team all american in infobox?
Done.
"but then at the last minute the University" comma after minute
Done.
"Upon returning to the Chiefs, he was placed on the injured reserve list, where he spent the entire season" that source doesnt say he spent the whole season
You're right, changed.
"the Oakland Raiders, his final team,[1] in 2006, spending the season on injured reserve" I don't see on either one of those sources where it says injured reserve
This one is the transactions where it says that he was placed on IR (right side, second team).
That still doesn't say he spent the whole season on IR. According to this, it looks like he was released? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:22, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: Good find! Yep, it looks like he was then released. I added that to the article. BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:36, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
I guess you couldn't find date spans for his coaching career?
Wasn't able to.
"including Joe III" that's a lot of commas for that sentence but I suggest a comma after Joe III
Added.
That's all I think. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 06:32, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

Starting to get to these... And thank you very much for your reviews!  BeanieFan11 (talk) 17:18, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 18:14, 19 October 2023 (UTC)
All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work!. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:44, 19 October 2023 (UTC)