# Talk:Evarcha striolata

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Nominator: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 15:30, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 22:06, 28 August 2024 (UTC)

"topside" to "top side"? also in the body
Done.
"The spider...long." Sentence is a bit long and hard to read, I'd split it up.
Nt sure how to do that. I have changed the structure a bit to hopefully make it clearer.
"in both the female and male is dark yellow" to "is dark yellow in both the female and male"?
Done.
I'd change it to "female spermathecae (receptacles at the end of the insemination ducts)", since the current phrasing makes it seem like the gloss also applies to palpal bulbs.
Changed.
No information about habitat in the lead?
Added.
'Named for a Latin word for a  "striped",' to 'Named for a Latin word meaning "striped",'
Changed.
"it was...the field." per comment at last review, this makes it seem like the species makes her a prolific author.
Removed.
"The genus  is one of the most speciose" Most speciose what? Genera of jumping spiders or spiders in general?
Clarified.
"The genus is closely related to the genera Hyllus and Plexippus." Should be attributed to whoever had this opinion, since the very next sentence has it placed in a clade with two other genera.
Added.
"named after the genus" I'd cut this, it's kind of obvious and makes the sentence harder to read.
REmoved.
The description of the taxonomy is very muddled; you start by saying it's in a subfamily with two other genera, then say it's closely related to two others, then mention it being put in a clade with yet another two, and end by saying it's very closely related to another genus? I have no idea how these relationships intersect with each other and it's just very confusing, honestly. Are there any cladograms that could be used to make it clearer?
I have not found one. It seems that there are multiple opinions, which I am trying to convey. I have rearranged the sentences so hopefully this is clearer.
"flavocin" Link and explain why this is part of the generic name.
The source just states "Name is created as arbitrary combination of letters coined of words Eva-[rcha] and [flavo]-cin [cta] indicating relation to Evarcha." I feel that commenting on the relationship with Evarcha is superfluous.
"back.it is" typo
Fixed.
"measuring typically" to "typically measuring"?
Changed.
"similar in shape but larger" to "similar in shape to but larger"
Changed.
"and savanna dominated" to "and in savanna dominated"
Added.
"It will eat a wide" to "It eats a wide" Also, is this about striolata or is it still referring to arcuata? If it's arcuata, make that clearer in the text.
It is a comment on all Evarcha spiders. Changed and clarified.
Will do spot-checks later.
I see there's a couple other photos on Commons; maybe add a couple more photos of different views in the body. AryKun (talk) 19:41, 8 September 2024 (UTC)
I have added one, a lateral view. Please tell me which of the others would be worth adding. simongraham (talk) 04:14, 9 September 2024 (UTC)
File:Evarcha striolata 18057881.jpg and File:Evarcha striolata 18057857.jpg might be worth adding since they offer a frontal view of the spider.
Source review: Spot-checked the following sources and found no issues, Earwig also doesn't turn up any copyright infringement.
Wesołowska, Wanda; Haddad, Charles R. (2009). "Jumping Spiders (Araneae: Salticidae) of the Ndumo Game Reserve, Maputaland, South Africa". African Invertebrates.
Wesołowska, Wanda; Haddad, Charles R. (2013). "New data on the jumping spiders of South Africa (Araneae: Salticidae)". African Invertebrates
Rößler, Daniela C.; De Agrò, Massimo; Biundo, Elia; Shamble, Paul S. (2021). "Hanging by a thread: unusual nocturnal resting behaviour in a jumping spider". Frontiers in Zoology
Haddad, Charles R.; Wesołowska, Wanda (2011). "New species and new records of jumping spiders (Araneae: Salticidae) from central South Africa". African Invertebrates