# Talk:José Manuel Garza Rendón

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 03:40, 29 September 2019 (UTC)
I'll review this one, too; comments to follow Kingsif (talk) 03:40, 29 September 2019 (UTC)


### Style
Lead good length
Intro to early life and career well-written, FBI profile could use a time frame because it seems to refer to when he was in sixth grade
Potentially could have a sentence explaining the relevance of the nightclub info (i.e. they were looking for him), but not necessary
Manhunt and charges section otherwise good
Surrender section nice
The Imprisonment and deportation section (second paragraph) mentions 3 times that it's not known if he testified against other cartel members. All times it seems appropriate, but if possible the phrasing of one or two could be tweaked because it feels a bit like it's just repeating at the moment
Could incorporate the quotes into the text better
Again, a sense of repetition with saying that he could be targeted for informing
 Done – I've rephrased the FBI profile and the "Imprisonment and deportation section". I kept the last mention because it was specifically about his boss (which I had not clarified before). Feel free to remove it. In addition, the two mentions about being targeted for informing say that he was in danger both in and out of prison. MX (✉ • ✎) 17:29, 30 September 2019 (UTC)


### Coverage
Lead good overview
Good coverage in early life and career, appropriate depth and use of source info
Manhunt and charges pretty good (see note above)
Looks good but seems to stop at 2009 - nothing since?
Glad you bring this up. Short answer is no, there is no public info about him after he was charged in 2009. I've looked into government archives, newspaper databases, done advanced searches on Google, but nothing comes up. I reached out to the Mexican federal government several months back through their Ley de Transparencia (English: Transparency Law) requesting information about Mr. Garza Rendón's legal status (if he was convicted, how long was his conviction, what charges was he convicted of, if/when he was released, if he had any outstanding charges or if he was facing trial). I received a negative response, where authorities indicated that I needed his approval to receive such information. I have a PDF from the Mexican government with their response, should you or anyone else need it. MX (✉ • ✎) 17:29, 30 September 2019 (UTC)


### Illustration
One infobox image, suffices
Pass


### Neutrality
Good tone throughout
Pass


### Stability
Stable history
Pass


### Verifiability
Sources all good
Everything cited in-line
Pass


### Copyright
Check looks clean
Infobox image good fair use
Pass


### Overall
on hold A few things in style and coverage Kingsif (talk) 21:07, 29 September 2019 (UTC)
 @MX: Thanks for the comments and edits! Nice working with you :) Kingsif (talk) 17:51, 30 September 2019 (UTC)