# Talk:Coors strike and boycott

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Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 14:31, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be reviewing this article as part of the July 2021 good article nominations backlog drive! Any section that I've marked with a  Working tag means that I haven't finished leaving comments there, but you're free to begin making changes as soon as you see them! Kncny11 (shoot) 14:31, 1 July 2021 (UTC)


### Lede
Use the {{short description}} template at the top to give a quick description of the event – something like, "20th century labor action against Coors Brewing Company"


### Background
"to not be" → "not to be"
Done.
"requiring the beer" → "which required the beer"
Done.
Capitalize the W in "American West"
Done.
"Coors's" → "Coors'"
Done.
Split the sentence beginning "In 1974" into two, with the break after "Public Broadcasting." That'll keep it from being too long
Done.


### Boycott begins
Delink discrimination, race, newspaper, and pub, per MOS:OVERLINK
Done.
Do link African American the first time it appears
Done.
"approximately 2%" → "approximately 2 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
Done.
"Joseph Coors's" → "Joseph Coors'"
Done.
"the college later got" → "the college later filed"
Done.
"45%" → "45 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
Done.
Explain what Harvey Milk's political station was at the time
Done.
WL the Briggs Amendment
Done.


### Strike action
WL The New York Times
I'm not sure if doing so would be overlinking, as I already linked The New York Times in the Background section.
Delink "firing" and "seniority", per MOS:OVERLINK
Done.
"92%" → "92 percent" per MOS:PERCENT
Done.
Specify April 5, 1977 in the text
Done.
"However, on April 6," → "However, the next day,"
Done.
"they would possibly" → "they ran the risk"
Done.
"decertify the union, and after" → "decertify the union, and, after"
Done.


### Continued boycott
"In 1979, both the American GI Forum and the Mexican American Political Association (a California-based organization)" → "In 1979, botht he American GI Forum and the California-based Mexican American Political Association"
Done.
"announced that they were ending"
Done.
"Forum stating that there had been"
Done.
"that Coors sponsored" → "sponsored by Coors"
Done.
"Joseph Coors's opposition" → "Joseph Coors' opposition"
Done.
the company "signed a $325 million [missing word]"
Fixed.
Delink "advertisement", per MOS:OVERLINK
Done.


### End of the boycott
In February 1987, the AFL–CIO rejected an offer put forward by Coors, but later that year, on August 19, they announced an end to the boycott after reaching an agreement with the company. → The AFL–CIO rejected Coors' initial offer in February 1987, but on August 19, they announced that they had come to an agreement with the company and would be ending their boycott.
Done.
Use an en dash rather than a hyphen for the Tasini quote, you can use the template  – 
Done.


### Impact
In the second and third sentence, change all instances of the % symbol to the word "percent", per MOS:PERCENT
Done.
However, these numbers and the impact the boycott had on the decline is disputed by company representatives. The placement of this sentence is not intuitive, as it's immediately followed by a sentence where they admit that the boycott played a role. Maybe after the LA Times quote is better
Rearranged the section a bit.
"Coors's" → "Coors'"
Done.


### Legacy in the LGBT community
For GLAAD, WL the full name and not the acronym
Done.
"several highlighting" → "several of which highlighted"
Done.
If I'm reading it properly, that the "targeting the community" phrase is in relation to the advertisements, then the section in parentheticals should be moved to after the word "community"
Done.


### References
Very good job on using the bibliography code and on archiving the sources!
Thanks!
Reduce any of the NYT articles that are currently in uppercase down to title case, per MOS:ALLCAPS
Done.


### General comments
Pictures are all available for use and are relevant to the article
No stability problems present
Earwig copyvio score checks out at 37.1%, with the highest percentages due to attributed direct quotations
Broadness, focus, and neutrality all check out
Great job so far! Mostly just some nitpicky things for flow, as well as some of our less intuitive manual of style guidelines (the percentage one always throws me, too). The only other general comment I would make is that there are a lot of parenthetical comments here, and if those can be worked into the flow of the sentence, that usually looks better from an encyclopedic perspective. I noted at least one example above. Let me know if you have any questions, and I'll put this on hold to allow comments to be addressed! Kncny11 (shoot) 17:58, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Kncny11, just wanted to reach out and let you know I addressed your comments here and think the page should be good to go now. Thanks for starting this review, and if there are any further comments or concerns, feel free to reach out. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 01:12, 2 July 2021 (UTC)
Looks all good on my end. Happy to pass! Kncny11 (shoot) 03:53, 2 July 2021 (UTC)