# Talk:Hurricane Hilary (1993)

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Reviewer: The Bushranger (talk · contribs) 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
 The following issues in the text need to be addressed before this can be passed for GA:

Lede
"Hurricane Hillary was a Category 3 hurricane..." Might want to clarify "East Pacific"/"Pacific Ocean" or something, as the reader could presume it was an Atlantic hurricane otherwise.
Meh, added. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
"Nearly stalled as it underwent a Fujiwhara interaction..." Would suggest just "as it interacted with" and move the Fujiwhara comment and link to "Meteorological History", to tighten and simplify the lede a bit. The fact it intereacted is sufficent for the lede, I think; how it interacted can be explained in more detail later.
 Done. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
The line about watches and warnings is slightly confusing. The threat ended? Then started again? Suggest similifying this a bit.
Yea, it ended, but started again, but explained that further via a wikilink to. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
Meteorological History
Should wikilink convection and tropical wave.
 Done. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
"the depression intensified into..." suggest "the depression intensified, becoming..."
Incorporated. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
"atmospheric circulation..." does this mean Low-level Circulation Center? I'd assume the circulation would be fairly easy to find, but pinning down the center might be difficult.
Yea, change the wording. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
"meteorolgists remarked the possibility of making landfall..." Bit of a grammar issue here. Perhaps "meterologists suggested there was a possibility the storm might make landfall..."
 Done. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
"downgraded into a tropical storm..." suggeest "downgraded to a tropical storm..."
Ok. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
"while most of the mid to upper level moisture..." suggest adding "associated with the storm" immediately after this.
 Done. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
Preparations and Impact
"further advisories were issued..." What sort of advisories?
Watches and warnings.
"Heavy rains, peaking at..." suggest "Heavy rains, with a maximum recorded amount of..."
 Done. YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)
"Baja California Peninsula", shouldn't that be a lowercase P?
No, it is a proper known (a type of peninsula). YE  Pacific Hurricane 16:37, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

 Pictures are all appropriately licensed;
 References are from reliable sources and are inline appropriately, meets WP:V, WP:RS, WP:NOR;
 Appears to be free of copyvio/paraphasing/plagarism concerns
 Covers the topic well without going off on tangents;
 Is neutral and stable;
 MOS adhered to.
I'm putting this  On hold until the grammar/text issues above are resolved. - The Bushranger One ping only 01:29, 29 December 2011 (UTC)

Nice work. I'm calling this a  Pass. - The Bushranger One ping only 00:46, 30 December 2011 (UTC)