# Talk:Domnall mac Murchada

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 09:12, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

What an interesting-sounding topic. Happy to offer a review. Josh Milburn (talk) 09:12, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

Could we have a link for Donnchad (Domnall's brother), even if red? If he was a later kind, he's surely notable?
The tern "overlord" is never properly explained, I don't think, and it does seem to be key to understanding the article.
"unable to ride out the revolt" What do you mean by this?
"Within the year, the Annals of Inisfallen, the Annals of the Four Masters, and the Annals of Ulster reveal" This isn't quite right. I think you mean that these various works reveal that within the year x happened, not that their revelation of x occurred within the year.
The images are fine, the sources are excellent (I'm not going to quibble about any formatting worries). Although I did struggle to follow the narrative, this is because of the complex relationships and my ignorance of Irish names- the writing is very strong. Josh Milburn (talk) 09:56, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

I think I've taken care of things. Donnchad is now wiki-linked. I added a family tree at the beginning as well. I've expanded things a bit to show that Toirdelbach's actions in Leinster, before Diarmait's death, were meant to quell the Uí Chennselaig infighting; and that his actions in Leinster and Dublin after Diarmait's death were undertaken in the context of striving for the high-kingship. I reworded the 'ride out' bit and used 'continue on with', and took care of the annals bit you spotted. I also converted a note about the poem into a quote box.--Brianann MacAmhlaidh (talk) 00:17, 30 September 2015 (UTC)
Looking through again, I'm more than happy that this ready for GA status. A very strong article- great work. Josh Milburn (talk) 16:11, 3 October 2015 (UTC)
Thanks for the review Josh.--Brianann MacAmhlaidh (talk) 23:40, 4 October 2015 (UTC)