# Talk:Gaalipata

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Gaalipata/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Ribbet32 (talk · contribs) 01:59, 16 August 2017 (UTC)

Well-written:
1a  Needs definite polishing, but I think I can provide detailed advice on how to do it. 
Lede: Misplaced ":" after "Kite". "each of them get involved romantically with the daughters" is more concisely and less confusingly rendered as "they become romantically involved with the daughters". "and was edited by" should be "and the film was edited by". No need to say twice in lede it's in Kannada. Remove language from first sentence and move the link to the second para. "performance" should be "performances"

Plot: Remove actor names, redundant to Cast section. Semicolon after "engineer" should be a comma, and "caught by cops drunk driving" should be "caught by police for drunk driving". "they use Ganesh's father (Rangayana Raghu), a legislator's influence to get away" should be "they use the influence of Ganesh's father, a legislator, to escape consequences". Next sentence "The latter visits the next day to enquire and on learning Ganesh's ways, leaves furiously." should be deleted, it is confusing and appears irrelevant. "To cheer up Kitty who went through a breakup with girlfriend " should be "To cheer up Kitty after a breakup with his girlfriend". "practices it"- what is "it"? "fascinated on" should be "fascinated with". Delete "down" and ", after the latter's family reluctantly accedes" in that sentence (redundant). Delete ", thus only injuring him" (redundant). ", when Ganesh accompanies, to drop her."- you mean "Ganese accompanies her"?  "she confides in him."- confides what in him? Also, do you really mean to say the boys stayed in an outhouse?
Filming: "Against schedule of beginning the principal photography on 22 June 2007," should be "Despite the beginning of principal photography being scheduled for 22 June 2007,"
Release and reception: Can link Karnataka. 99% of readers in North America won't know where or what this is.
Critical response: Delete first para. Unreferenced and redundant to what's below. "THIS" can be cleaned up to "This".
Legacy: "The pair of Yogaraj Bhat and his had delivered" should be "Yogaraj Bhat had delivered his"
1b    Needs organizational adjustment. Accolades should be subsection of Release and reception and Legacy should go after. 

Verifiable with no original research

2a    Thoroughly referenced
2b   Reference 2 is a blog- whose is it? Is it reliable? In Filming, the claim that it was first Kannada film in Super 35 needs citation. In Legacy, this movie making Ganesh a demanded actor needs reference. 
2c.  Not concerned about OR if 2b is addressed
2d.  No concerns

Broad in its coverage:

3a.  The credits list at the front of Production is not regularly done. It should be replaced with the missing piece of the puzzle: Whenever I see a film I really enjoy, and not based on the book, I always ask, where did this idea come from? How was it written? Who initiated production?
3b.  Not a lot off topic

Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
4.  No concerns.
Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
5. No edit wars taking place
Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio
6.  Photos are free or attributed

Ribbet32, thank you for these details and making the job easy. Most changes as directed by you have been made. I need your suggestions for the following: "it" in "Radha, a student of Ayurveda, practices it alongside" in the plot section means, Radha is a student and a practitioner of Ayurveda; and "she confides in him" in that she expresses her feelings for him while breaking down. How could these sentences be re-framed? Yes, reference 2 is a blog, but its content appears to be a copy-paste from a newspaper, the source of which I was unable to find, which is why I have retained that link. "The credits list at the front of Production" has been deleted, and a couple of lines have been added into the new "Development" sub-section. I understand that it isn't enough, but considering that this is an article of a now 9-year-old film of a regional Indian language, there are not very many sources readily available online. I shall still try my best and find some sources if you feel it is really necessary. Thanks. Editor5454 (talk) 17:06, 21 August 2017 (UTC)
And yes, the outhouse, haha! It is a colloquial usage for 'guesthouse' in India. I've replaced it. Editor5454 (talk) 17:09, 21 August 2017 (UTC)
@Editor5454: Sorry, I didn't click on Ayurveda to see what that meant. It doesn't need clarification; practicing "it" makes perfect sense. How about "confides in him that she has romantic interest in him"? Some things left over:
Do you know where the idea for the story came from? Any reliable sources to that effect?
Anant Nag link got left in Plot section. There should be a semicolon after "medical student" and "caught by police" should be "are caught by police"
In Filming, "and was the first in Kannada films" would probably read better as ", a first for Kannada-language films".
Whose blog is it? If it's a copy-paste, that may be extra reason not to use it. Ribbet32 (talk) 20:20, 21 August 2017 (UTC)
@Ribbet32: I have removed the blog as reference and have cited ref. 1 for the content in question, as this source contains the said detail, albeit mentioned implicitly. Also, I could not find any sources on where the idea for the film's story came from. A film in the contemporary comedy and drama genre, it is not really one that is sort of what we could call a theme-based film. Here is the director's interview with a website, that again makes hardly any mention of the film's development stages. Editor5454 (talk) 04:12, 22 August 2017 (UTC)
@Editor5454: Thank you, I'll assume your good faith as to the extent of your research into development. Taking another look:
 to cut down on repetition in lede, I'd make "The film was the first in Kannada" into "Gaalipata was the first in Kannada"
"confides in him"- professes her love for him?
"The film was announced in early June 2007"- reference?  Ribbet32 (talk) 04:49, 22 August 2017 (UTC)
@Ribbet32: Addressed. Please take a look. Editor5454 (talk) 06:40, 22 August 2017 (UTC)

Thank you for your work, @Editor5454:; I know it's frustrating to wait for months for a review. There's been a lot of improvement here during this candidacy. Ribbet32 (talk) 17:22, 22 August 2017 (UTC)
Thank you for your review @Ribbet32:. Very patiently you suggested solutions to the issues in the page, and to each of them individually. Certainly appreciate your work. Thanks! Editor5454 (talk) 18:15, 22 August 2017 (UTC)