# Talk:HMS Nottingham (1913)

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 11:35, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

I'll have this to you soon. JAGUAR  11:35, 1 April 2016 (UTC)


#### Initial comments
Once again I feel that the lead needs to be expanded somewhat to summarise the article. A couple of sentences on its career etc
"The Town-class cruisers were intended to protect British merchant shipping from attack by enemy cruisers" - attacks?
"The ships had a crew of 480 officers and other ranks" - this needs a citation
"During 1915 at The ships were protected by a waterline belt amidships" - broken?
"and the 1st LCS was escorting Vice-Admiral David Beatty's battlecruisers" - no need for hyphen in Vice Admiral (unless it was stylised that way in the early 1900s)
"he ship was assigned to the 1st Light Cruiser Squadron (LCS) of the Home Fleet" - link Home Fleet
"A few weeks after Britain joined the war on 4 August" - even though I know what it's on about, a mentioned of World War I would suit this sentence
"commander of the Grand Fleet" - link Grand Fleet
No dead links
Very good and well written article, I could find little wrong with it. Once all of the prose issues are addressed and the lead is expanded, this should have no problem passing.  JAGUAR  14:33, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

I think that I've addressed all of these; see if they work for you.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:52, 2 April 2016 (UTC)
Thanks, looks good. Promoted.  JAGUAR  10:18, 3 April 2016 (UTC)

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