# Talk:Daara J

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Quite a few more images here if you want to make it look prettier. :)
Prettified.
"consisting of N'Dongo D, Aladji Man, and Faada Freddy." - do all three of them just rap? Or are there instruments and stuff?
None of my sources say what each of them do specifically, besides rap...
Lead could do with a split into paragraphs (Mostly because I like paragraphs. And it makes things easier to comprehend.)
Paragraphed and cut a bit.
"when all of its members were in high school,[1] where they were studying accountancy" - I've never seen a high school where you can specifically study something (like accounting...)...you sure this isn't a university?
See the radio interview; apparently they do things differently in Senegal. :)
"as well as Cuban music" - reading here, it sounds like Cuban music is a band... reword this sentence
Tweaked.
"Positive Black Soul, another Senegalese rap group, wanted Daara J to record and perform" - feels like there's something missing.... to record and perform with them?
Changed to "encourage"; don't think they ever formally performed together.
"praising the album for its lyrical content: "However, as Daara J show throughout Boomerang" - can you remove the however? It's kinda... weird, since it's not contradicting anything.
Yesterday you criticize your own writing, now you criticize the quote? What's next, mine? :)...Removed.
One day, I promise. dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 23:16, 30 May 2008 (UTC)
Not sure if the final Wikinews link is really necessary (says while doing this offline)... does it mention Daara J in any depth?
Removed. --Kakofonous (talk) 20:35, 29 May 2008 (UTC)

Please leave a note on my talk page when you're done with these comments. Cheers, dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 09:32, 29 May 2008 (UTC)

Passed! dihydrogen monoxide (H2O) 23:17, 30 May 2008 (UTC)

I think they have a new album, and I think they changed their name to Daara J family...  — Preceding unsigned comment added by 203.129.60.190 (talk) 04:23, 6 June 2011 (UTC) 

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