# Talk:HMS Carysfort (1914)

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 11:35, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

I'll have this to you soon. JAGUAR  11:35, 1 April 2016 (UTC)


### Initial comments
I think that the lead could be expanded somewhat to summarise the article. The body of the article is quite comprehensive, so adding some details about its career might be possible
See how it suits now.
The lead doesn't mention when or where she was commissioned
Normally I only orientate the reader to the decade in which a ship was built and leave the rest for the main body. But since people might not actually know when WWI was, I've added the year.
"For anti-aircraft defence, she was fitted with one QF 6-pounder 57 mm (2.2 in) Hotchkiss gun. The ship also mounted two twin, above-water, mounts for 21 in (533 mm) torpedos" - any reason why metric is before imperial in the first instance? Also, isn't torpedoes the correct plural?
"The walls of their conning tower were 6 inches thick" - convert to millimetres
Already done of first use.
"was replaced by a Ordnance QF 3-pounder 47 mm (1.9 in)" - metric is mentioned before imperial here. I'm fine with it but I was wondering if it was an oversight?
"in occupied Belgium" - link German occupation of Belgium during World War I
Good idea.
No dead links
Those were all of the minor issues I could bring up. But overall, it's a well written and comprehensive article.  JAGUAR  11:57, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. Let me know if any issues still remain.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:34, 1 April 2016 (UTC)
Thanks for addressing them! With all of those out of the way, this meets the GA criteria now.  JAGUAR  20:56, 1 April 2016 (UTC)