# Talk:HMS Duncan (1901)

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Reviewer: Kges1901 (talk · contribs) 02:21, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
I'll take this one as well. Comments:
Lead

Suggest linking 12-inch guns
Done
 she was reorganized into the Home Fleet is potentially confusing, perhaps reword as transferred to the Home Fleet when the Mediterranean Fleet was reorganized into a squadron of it' or something similar
That works for me.
and converted 'was' may be necessary here
Fixed
More later. Kges1901 (talk) 02:21, 23 December 2018 (UTC)

Thanks - I've fixed the Design section issues you highlighted in the Montagu/Cornwallis reviews, so hopefully that'll save you a little time ;) Parsecboy (talk) 17:22, 24 December 2018 (UTC)
Operational history

In general, you have year duplication in this section
Fixed
 four surviving sister ships of the Duncan class could just be 'surviving sister ships' and not mention class
Done
abolished temporarily suggest 'temporarily abolished'
Done
Duncan and her four Duncan-class sisters, as well as the battleships of the King Edward VII class, temporarily were transferred no need to mention class name again, suggest 'were temporarily transferred' instead
Done
Albemarle and the rest of the 3rd Squadron Shouldn't that be Duncan instead?
Indeed
use the fleet in an active way Suggest 'use the fleet for active operations'
Sounds good to me
neutral Greece 'neutral' is redundant
Good catch
dup link Salonika
Fixed
operations against Greek royalists what exactly were these operations?
Added a bit of detail on this
Is the shipbreaking company notable enough for a link?
Probably not
Suggest adding at least one image to the body, as the service history has no media currently
I don't know that there's a good option - I could do a map, but the ship kind of bounced around during the war and wasn't particularly active in any single area
How about File:HMS Duncan (1901) in 1908.jpg?
"Probably Royal Navy" is not good enough - we need to know who took it and when it was published. Parsecboy (talk) 21:18, 27 December 2018 (UTC)
Does Burt not have image credits? There is also the ship badge on commons. Kges1901 (talk) 21:33, 27 December 2018 (UTC)
No, he doesn't attribute any of the photos. I don't know what use the badge would be, apart from purely decorative. Unfortunately, the British pre-dreadnoughts don't have many pictures of them available online (that are easily provable to be in the public domain - my go-to resource is the NHHC's collection, but for whatever unknown reason, it doesn't include many British ships). Parsecboy (talk) 21:49, 27 December 2018 (UTC)
That's all I have. Kges1901 (talk) 17:02, 27 December 2018 (UTC)