# Talk:HMS Mohawk (F31)

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 07:24, 5 December 2020 (UTC)

", although the throwers were not mounted in all ships;[9] Twenty" - You'll want a period instead of the semicolon, I believe.
Oops
Do we know if Mohawk was one of the ones fitted with the throwers or not?
Unknown
Laid down date varies between infobox and prose
"When the Fascist Italy" - Drop the "the", maybe?
"while Mohawk and the destroyer Kelly working up" - I feel like you're missing a word in here
Can't imagine why!
Is it worth mentioning the bombing incident that killed or wounded 45 crewman in the lead?
Maybe, but I went ahead and did it any way.
"an inaccurate spot report of a German battlecruiser and cruiser that afternoon, forestalled the searches as the destroyers were recalled" - Is the comma in here necessary?
"during a bombardment of near Bardia, Italian Libya," - There's either one too few or one too many words here, not for sure.
"but they were detached at dusk on 28 March to find and sink the badly damaged Vittorio Veneto" - Can you gloss the type of ship  Vittorio Veneto was?
Other than that, it looks fine to me. Hog Farm  Bacon 00:09, 6 December 2020 (UTC)

Nice to hear. See if I've addressed everything satisfactorily.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 12:25, 9 December 2020 (UTC)