# Talk:Cookie Brinkman

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Nominator: JTtheOG (talk · contribs) 03:38, 23 February 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 20:50, 20 July 2024 (UTC)

I'll give this article a review shortly. Wizardman 20:50, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
Image and source review: No images to review, but given the subject's scant career that's understandable. I tried looking for even a yearbook photo that might be free use but came up empty. I don't believe in requiring a fair use image just to have one, so this criteria passes. Ref #32 needs a publisher. Other than that all the references look like they are quality sources, and I appreciate the clippings so I can do a closer spotcheck later. Wizardman 21:10, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
Prose review: The lead feels on the short side, but in fairness I can't really think of anything that would have to be added to it, and lengthening it for the sake of length wouldn't really be helpful in this case. I did a little bit of copyediting rather than noting every little thing here and didn't see anything egregious. I've never been a fan of the "as of" type sentences as it feels dated (As of 2009, Brinkman was the vice president of marketing at ASI Building Products) so that could use a rewrite. Other than that the prose seems good, so I'll move on to a spotcheck (I did already check the 50 pound source because I found that hard to believe, but sure enough there it was). Wizardman 21:52, 20 July 2024 (UTC)
Source spotcheck: I reviewed sources 6, 12, 18, 24, and 40 for both copyright and making sure the material is actually in the source. All of them are appropriately cited and I see no issues. I can split hairs and say Refs #24 and 25 showcase the same information so only one is needed, but that's a minor issue.
Overall the only remaining issue I see is that I would like to see the lead expanded a bit. It doesn't have to be anything crazy but it should be a full paragraph of information. I'll put the article on hold pending that fix. Wizardman 19:20, 21 July 2024 (UTC)

Done. Please let me know about any suggestions, however nitpicky, as I am not the best at writing leads. JTtheOG (talk) 21:31, 21 July 2024 (UTC)
Looks much better now. Leads are my weak spot so I can relate but this looks good. Since that was my only remaining issue I'm happy to pass the article. Wizardman 23:30, 22 July 2024 (UTC)