# Talk:New York State Route 420

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Comments:

The lead of the article is a little short. Can more information be added?
Not really; the vast majority of NY 420's routing is fairly unremarkable as is already indicated in the lead. I also believe the level of detail in the lead regarding the route's history is sufficient. If you have any specific ideas on what is missing or could be added, please advise as I don't see a lot of possibility for expansion myself.
"as it passes by several buildings, ranging from industrial warehouses to residences." sounds wordy. "as it passes by industrial warehouses to residences." would suffice here.
Reworded.
In the route description, you use NY 420 in almost every sentence. Can more variety in wording be used?
Reworded several.
I am placing the article on hold. Dough4872 (talk) 16:39, 8 July 2009 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. – TMF 18:07, 8 July 2009 (UTC)
I will pass the article. Dough4872 (talk) 18:59, 8 July 2009 (UTC)