# Talk:HMS Stronghold

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 18:38, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

"The ship is significant as one " -> "The ship was one "
Fixed.
"RAE 1921 Target" no article??
Not yet. I have added a redlink.
"over twenty" more than twenty
Fixed.
"in 1941 and, in 1942" perhaps "and the following year"
Good idea.
"the Australian vessel's" Royal Australian Navy vessel (and link)
Done.
could link reconnaissance, and also seaplane.
Done.
"300 tons of oil " avoid starting sentences with numerals, and convert, what kind of tons?
Reworded, converted and linked.
"single 40-millimetre (1.6 in) 2-pounder pom-pom" was it really measured in millimetres when the mass was in pounds?
Yes. The 40-mm was called a 2-pounder.
"Fire control" link?
Done.
"the RAE 1921 Target" unmanned vehicle.
Done
"thirty-eight mines" 38?
I think it reads better in words.
"The Second World War" heading, no need for The.
Removed.
"the capital ship" what's one of those.
In this case, a battlecruiser. Linked.
"15 and 22 kn (28 and 41 km/h; 17 and 25 mph)." no ref.
Fixed.
"seaplane 300 mi (480 km) south of Bali.[23] The seaplane reported the position of the British vessel to the Japanese fleet." merge this, e.g. "seaplane 300 mi (480 km) south of Bali,[23] which reported its position to the Japanese fleet...."
Done.
Evans, year range needs en-dash.
Fixed.
Sturtivant and Womack likewise.
Fixed.
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 21:48, 5 September 2021 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thank you for your review. I have made the changes.  simongraham (talk)