# Talk:Byne's disease

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:43, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
Hi, I'll begin reviewing here, and will make straightforward changes as I go (hopefully with explanations in edit summaries). Feel free to revert changes which inadvertently change the meaning. I will post queries below. Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:43, 15 November 2009 (UTC)

For flow in the lead, I think I'd put para 2 above para 3 as one wants to know what it is before what else it attacks.
I agree. Done!--Daniel Cavallari (talk) 19:07, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
I would have thought 'alkaline' was more widely understood and less ambiguous than 'basic' these days...(?)
I feel the material is too short in the  History section to warrant subsection. It also interrupts with the flow of storytelling.
The first time someone is mentioned by name, I feel adding a couple of descriptors is valuable in understanding (usually nationality and occupation, eg. English naturalist, American zoologist etc.)
Their deep analysis, involving many complex and sophisticated techniques,... - this leaves me curious, and does come across as a little patronising - eg 'too complicated for you poor readers to know.' I am sure some discussion can be included here :)
Yes, I believe you are right. I have access to this paper, so I put in some more detail. Surprisingly enough, there were articles covering all the techniques. That's very good! --Daniel Cavallari (talk) 16:07, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
Details of the chemical reactions is a little unwieldy as a heading. Could be simply 'chemistry' or even 'biochemistry'.

Second Reviewer: --Snek01 (talk) 18:53, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
1. Well written?:

Prose quality: will not be checked (I am not good at English.)
Improve this "In the first case," to much detailed.
Manual of Style compliance: 
proposal: Clarification and  Resolution merge to "Discovery of the cause".
proposal: Process Rename to "Chemistry" and ommitt caption name "Details of the chemical reactions". (Add PVC reaction if needed.)
proposal: Add wikilinks to the materials in table row "Archival materials without acidic fumes". Added.
2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:

References to sources: 
Not referenced PVC problem.
Done.
Citations to reliable sources, where required: 
No original research: 
3. Broad in coverage?: 

Major aspects:
Not explained, why the PVC is problem.
Done.
Now explained and supported by Sturm (2006).--Daniel Cavallari (talk) 22:38, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
Focused: 
4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:

Fair representation without bias: 
5. Reasonably stable?

No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA): 
6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:

Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales: 
Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
One alt text missing.
I will crop the File:File:Bynesian Decay 001.JPG. May I? --Snek01 (talk) 18:53, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
Sure! Please go ahead.--Daniel Cavallari (talk) 19:04, 15 November 2009 (UTC)
Cropped and colors altered. --Snek01 (talk) 23:20, 16 November 2009 (UTC)
What about to add one sentence about an alternative way/ways(?) of storage? The only alternative is ethanol, I think.
A link to display case... ?
--Snek01 (talk) 23:30, 16 November 2009 (UTC)
okay, we're over the line...Casliber (talk · contribs) 20:35, 17 November 2009 (UTC)

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