# Talk:Jim Delsing

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 21:30, 24 May 2020 (UTC)


### Criteria
1. Prose  On hold
2. Verifiability  On hold
3. Depth of Coverage  Pass
4. Neutral  Pass
5. Stable  Pass
6. Illustrations  Pass
7. Miscellaneous  On hold


### Comments
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"Green Bay finished a half-game back of Sheboygan for the league pennant" - If the Sheboygan team has an article, link it.
"He had three hits in a game three times during the year: July 16, August 9, and August 11" - Do you think it's worth mentioning the opponents?
"In nine games, Delsing batted .350 with five runs scored, seven hits, and three RBI" - I'm wondering if it should be RBIs, not RBI.
There's two schools of thought on it, and I think either is acceptable. The argument for RBIs is that it's plural; therefore, there should be an s on the end. The argument for RBI is that the abbreviation is for "runs batted in," and putting an s on the end makes it look like it stands for "run batted ins." Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:01, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
"Winthrop Street and Evergreen Road in the Northwest part of Detroit" - Unless Northwest is the name of a specific region in Detroit, I don't think it should be capitalized.
I think you're right; good catch. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:02, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
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"He might have been injured at the end of June, as he left the Browns' game on June 19 in the fifth inning and did not play again for 13 games.[9] " - I'm not seeing a direct statement for this in the linked source.  It's a bit OR-ish to say that without a source to back up the idea, however plausible.
Changed to just say he left the game and did not play for 13 games, with no explanation. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:04, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
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Can playing career be split with some lower-level subheadings?  It's a very long section.
The section Delsing's description of his playing style is a very short section.  I'd recommend considering merging into the main career section, but if you object, it isn't a big deal.