# Talk:Nintendo of America, Inc. v. Blockbuster Entertainment Corp.

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Reviewer: PresN (talk · contribs) 01:15, 21 March 2023 (UTC)
This has been sitting here for way too long, so despite my relative lack of experience with law articles, I'm going to give it a go.

I pulled up a couple of your GA case articles (Midway Manufacturing Co. v. Artic International, Inc. and Lewis Galoob Toys, Inc. v. Nintendo of America, Inc.) for comparison, and there's an inconsistency in the first sentence that I'm not sure which way it should go: right now you have N v. B was a 1989 legal case, but in Lewis Galloob (but not Midway) articles you have "is a 1992 legal case". Which one should it be?
"this estimation raising to 20 million in consideration of the post-Christmas season." - oddly passive voice; consider "this estimate rose to 20 million in the post-Christmas season."
Link Compute!
"almost as many as the number of Commodore 64s sold in its first five years." - perhaps "almost as many consoles as the 1982 Commodore 64 sold in its first five years.", to avoid the "almost as many as the number" and also give context for how recent the C64 was
"revenue in 1989 was over $600 million cementing the brand" - comma after million, and {{US$}} for the dollar, since Nintendo is a non-US company so we should be clear this is all US dollars
A little odd that you're comparing Blockbuster's revenue to WCV's profit; I see in the source they're actually saying it's 180 million in revenue, which makes more sense for the comparison
"the Software Publishers Association promised to exclude video games from the new copyright protections" - I feel that you need to be a little more specific here; "video games", in modern parlance, include software-only games and computer games, so even if that's the term the SPA used you should specify that they were excluding cartridge-based or console games, not "video games" that could include floppy disk-based computer games.
You're inconsistent on the punctuation of the Video Software Dealers Association - the link is to "Dealers", but you have both "Dealer's" and "Dealers'" in the text. It doesn't appear to have used an apostrophe in the name at all.
"the bill passed through the Senate Judiciary Committee without protection for Nintendo's cartridges." - should maybe make it clear that it didn't have protection for non-Nintendo cartridges (Sega, etc.), even though this article is about Nintendo specifically
"requesting that Blockbuster cease photocopying and reproducing Nintendo's copyrighted video game manuals" - this is the first time (outside of the lead) that you mention that Blockbuster did this at all, so it should either get mentioned in the "facts" section that BB's rentals included copies of the manual, or this sentence should append that BB was including these manuals with the rentals.
"this followed with a formal lawsuit" - "this was followed by a formal lawsuit"
"The finally chose the latter option" - "They", but also, do you know when "finally" refers to? I'm guessing before whenever that VSDA convention was?
"rental of computer software without limiting the rental of video games." - same as above, "rental of video game cartridges".
"a similar model would be reasonable for games," - needs to be more clear that this is Sheff's opinion, not Wikipedia's authoritative voice, e.g. "he held that a similar model would be reasonable for games,"
"Blockbuster earned over $200 million in revenue from video game rentals." - annual revenue? Or cumulative?
"with Blockbuster filing for bankruptcy in 2010." - passive voice; "and Blockbuster filed for bankruptcy in 2010."
Link Xbox One
Refs 7 and 8 are to the same book (different page numbers), but have different formatting. Also, you have "pp. Prologue", but unless that's the name of a page it should be "ch. Prologue", e.g. "|chapter=Prologue"
Refs 14, 25, 27, 28 has a different date format than the rest
Ref 23 claims the author is "Ariz Tucson", but that's the name of the city that the AP newswire was filed in, not the author. Also, don't allcaps the AP NEWS
You link the book in ref 1, so you should link Game Over in ref 10
Don't link to google books (or other non-related commercial services) in ref 28
That's it! --PresN 01:15, 21 March 2023 (UTC)
Thank you for the review and I believe that I have finished everything. I am not familiar with the US$ template so I would appreciate any help with that if I am not using it correctly. Jorahm (talk) 18:56, 27 March 2023 (UTC)
Looks good; made a minor tweak and promoting. --PresN 19:41, 27 March 2023 (UTC)