# Talk:Danganronpa: Unlimited Battle

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Reviewer: Cognissonance (talk · contribs) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
Unlimited Battle! ..."ceased operations in November 2015..." Cognissonance (talk) 06:04, 28 October 2016 (UTC)


### Lead
"similarly to billiards" — Fix grammar: "as with billiards".
 Done
"confined arena area" — Coincide with Gameplay: "confined arena-like area".
 Done
"one noted that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series, however," — Improve flow: "one noted however that the game retained the style of the previous games in the series".
 Done


### Gameplay
Remove a repeated billiards link.
 Done
"in a billiards-like fashion" — Minimize repetition: "like billiards".
 Done
"After a certain number of turns had passed" — Minimize repetition: "With a certain number of turns passed".
 Done
"As the player defeated enemies, the enemies would drop two types of items" — Simplify: "Defeated enemies would drop two types of items".
 Done
"of the player's character" — Simplify: "of the player character".
Well, "player character" makes it sound like it's the player's avatar or whatever - the character representing them, or the character they control - which doesn't seem to be the case with the characters in DR:UB. Anyway, changed it to "their characters".


### Release and reception
The section should be written in past tense.
 Done
"found the game fun and requiring skill and strategy" — Clarify: "found the game fun, requiring skill and strategy".
 Done
"why Spike Chunsoft would chose a game known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" as a game for a touchscreen action game" — Fix grammar and clarify: "why Spike Chunsoft would choose a series known for "story of entrapment and murder mystery" to make a touchscreen action game".
 Done, but I went with "as the base for" rather than "to make".
Write the prefixes A at B with variation.
 Done


### Overall
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall: Ping me when you're done / have questions.
Pass/Fail: 
@IDV: Cognissonance (talk) 15:01, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
@Cognissonance: I believe I have fixed everything.--IDVtalk 15:24, 28 October 2016 (UTC)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
Pass/Fail: 
@IDV: Good stuff. Cognissonance (talk) 15:42, 28 October 2016 (UTC)