# Talk:Eve (Stellar Blade)

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Nominator: Kung Fu Man (talk · contribs) 01:08, 5 May 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 03:28, 5 May 2024 (UTC)
I'll be reviewing this article since it's smaller than I expected.Tintor2 (talk) 03:28, 5 May 2024 (UTC)
Everything looks good. I checked all the references and they seem reliable. While the infobox image looks good I suggest replacing the one from the reception in favor of sketches or a college of designs she can wear similar to how you wrote Tifa's article. I'm not sure if a future DYK nomination will be glad with that image if you consider making it.

Lead
Main protagonist sounds kinda redundant.
Fixed
Does she have little personality like a stoic person or the criticism finds her cold the developers wanted?
Clarified
Appearances
I suggest splitting the part of the alternative endings into another paragraph considering the amount of content it discusses.
Done
Reception
"Automaton's Taijiro Yamanaka" since it's the first writer I suggest adding "Automaton writer Taijiro Yamanaka".
Fixed
I would consider toning down a bit the quotes
Removed a few quote marks where the statements themselves sufficed
Maybe the Skin Suit could be illustrated if it is recognized by other critics too rather a gif.
I want to leave this because the Skin Suit's already shown in the GIF, but a big part of her discussion were her animations and regard for her own sex appeal, and that pose was specifically brought up to illustrate she had some agency regarding it in Henley's view.
Good work with this article. It was made quiet quickly and I'll be glad to pass it once you believe everything is okay.Tintor2 (talk) 04:29, 5 May 2024 (UTC)
@Kung Fu Man:

I think I got everything, let me know if there's anything else!--Kung Fu Man (talk) 15:10, 5 May 2024 (UTC)

The article seemingly contains some errors that someone with editing privileges should correct. They are as follows:

In the first sentence of the paragraph right before the start of the "In regards to sex appeal" section, the phrase "the Eve" is used (Josh Cotts and Game Rant meanwhile praised how Eve's personality was developed by several of the in-game mechanics, particularly through the Eve's own rejection of side quests that may be offered to the player); this would be better with just "Eve".
In the first paragraph of the "In regards to sex appeal" section, there is this statement: He further felt that it gave the implication just "want her from the neck down. It seems to be very much a statement of the parts of this woman that are of value." For this sentence to be correct, a subject who "wants her from the neck down" needs to be mentioned. The source uses "you", but the article should use something like "the developers" or something else, as using second person pronouns in Wikipedia is discouraged.
The second paragraph of the same section has a quote that needs tweaking: they were not uncommon mentalities for developers of characters such as Bayonetta or Lollipop Chainsaw's Juliet Starling, female characters who are "empowered, and clearly attractive, female hero who owns that part of who they are" and find strength in their sexuality. The issue here is that hero is singular, but should be plural. This can be solved by replacing with [heroes] or hero[es], but then owns should instead be own.
Those are all the issues I found. If others agree that these are errors, then they should be corrected. Thank you in advance, and have a nice day!
90.133.232.139 (talk) 13:26, 4 July 2024 (UTC)

 Done NatwonTSG2 (talk) 15:34, 4 July 2024 (UTC)