# Talk:Christmas Wishes (The Office)

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 (talk · contribs) 14:24, 5 January 2012 (UTC)
Will review this soon. Ruby 2010/2013 14:24, 5 January 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Comments
No need to link Ed Helms twice in lead; use "Andy (Helms)..."
"...to make everyone's Christmas wishes come true, including a drunken Erin" The drunken Erin part doesn't quite work in this sentence (maybe change to "including those of a drunken Erin")?
Why the mention of "Garden Party" in the lead?
Lead: ranked... ranked (switch it up); I also don't like the mention of Thursday (sounds too vague), change to "highest ranked NBC series of the night"?
Who drives away with a smile on his face? Andy or Robert?
Production: Italicize The Office
Ratings: Not a fan of the way you list NBC's timeslot competition ('...drama Person of Interest..."). Too  many commas I think. Try "beating CBS drama Person of Interest which received a 2.8 rating/7% share in the 18-49 demographic, Fox drama series Bones which received a 2.4 rating/6% share, and ABC reality series America's Funniest Home Videos..."   "Although all three shows received more total viewers than "Christmas Wishes"" could be moved to another sentence, or add a semicolon
Ref 13 has wrong publisher
Ref 17 needs date (December 9, 2011)
AOL TV
Unitalicize Twitter, TV Line, and TV by the Numbers. Do italicize TV Guide
IMBd is not a reliable source. You can cite those two episodes themselves for Kaling's writing credits
Any cultural references?
Overall a nice article. On hold for seven days while above comments get looked at. Please respond here when you have finished or have specific queries. Ruby 2010/2013 17:11, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

Alright, I think I've fixed everything. Only thing I couldn't quite nail down was the cultural references. gGranted, It has been awhile since I've seen the episode, but I can't remember off the top of my head/can't find go reliable sources.--Gen. Quon (talk) 20:34, 6 January 2012 (UTC)
Looks good. Passing for GA. Nice work, Ruby 2010/2013 21:36, 6 January 2012 (UTC)

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