# Talk:Herbert E. Balch

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Degree of Master of Arts
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Some excellent expansion has been undertaken on this article. I wondered if you had spotted the biography in the 1997 Belfry Bulletin (here) which includes some (poor quality) pictures of the railway carriage at Rookham - it says it was taken to The Forge Exhibition Centre, Marcroft Wagon Works, Rad­stock. If I can find out if it is still there I might even go and take some photos at the weekend as it is only a few miles from me.— Rod talk 19:38, 1 September 2016 (UTC)

It's in the article - last thing I added, as it happens. If you could get photos of the carriage, I'd be very grateful. Similarly with the plaque on the wall of the Wells and Mendip Museum, a picture of that would be great in the article. WormTT(talk) 19:39, 1 September 2016 (UTC)
I will contact them & see if it is possible to get access to the carriage. I may have one of the plaque at the museum but need to search through thousands of pics - or I can just go and take another one. BTW I'm not sure the redlink to Rookham is ever likely to be turned blue as there is not really anything there apart from  1 or 2 houses/farms - but there is an amazing pub The Hunters Rest Lodge Inn which takes you back at least 50 years (see Telegraph story, Holborn mag & nearby Hunter's Hole) - the cavers have a container in the back yard to keep their stuff in & it is where they all meet up.— Rod talk 19:50, 1 September 2016 (UTC)
Update Somerset and Avon Railway Company & Marcroft Wagon Works, Rad­stock seem to have ceased to exist in the last 20 years. There are several attempts at heritage railways in the area who could conceivably have got it (eg Midsomer Norton railway station but would be a bit of a wild goose chase.— Rod talk 19:57, 1 September 2016 (UTC)
There is also a [road named after him http://www.geograph.org.uk/photo/4066355] which apparently has a statement about him which would be useful. This is the only source I can find which states it is there and unhelpfully the picture doesn't show it! ツStacey (talk) 19:52, 1 September 2016 (UTC)
I feel a trip to Balch Road & the Museum coming on at the weekend.— Rod talk 19:57, 1 September 2016 (UTC)
We have access to Jstor, British Newspaper Archives, Oxford biography, Times archive and Newsbank - If you need any help on future articles give us a shout, I enjoy doing the research bit - I'm not so good at the writing! ツStacey (talk) 20:39, 1 September 2016 (UTC)
Thanks - I have access to those through work (or BNA through wikipedia) & I also like the "finding stuff" including photos etc, but struggle to find the time to get all the articles to GA/FA that  I always plan to do when I start them. I might nip into the museum for more sources on Balch when I'm there— Rod talk 20:47, 1 September 2016 (UTC)
@Staceydolxx and Worm That Turned:, Just found a day with decent weather + some time to nip to Wells. See File:Plaque on Wells Museum to Herbert E Balch.jpg & File:Road sign and information about Herbert E. Balch.jpg.— Rod talk 12:02, 22 September 2016 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Herbert E. Balch/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 09:59, 2 September 2016 (UTC)
I propose taking on this review. I was at one time a keen caver and am reputed to have first met my husband in a cave; the Daily Mail stated this under the heading "Cave romance" so it must be true! Cwmhiraeth (talk) 09:59, 2 September 2016 (UTC)

Well, I've only caved once, so I hope that I've done the article justice! Is your husband one of the cave-dwellers? WormTT(talk) 10:05, 2 September 2016 (UTC)


### First reading
The article seems basically sound but lacks polish.

"He left school at 14 and became messenger boy at Wells post office, where remained for his entire working life, working his way up to postmaster." - This sentence needs attention.
 Done
"As Balch finished his formal education early, he compensated through self improvement, discovering new caving techniques and carefully recording his finds." - This sentence is a bit of a non-sequitur and could be rephrased.
 Done
"Whilst working as a messenger, he spent a lot of time at Wookey Hole, where he began caving in the mid-1880s" - Did his messenger duties take him underground?
 Done
"He would spend his free time on Saturdays and sometimes leaving directly after work, caving overnight returning in time to wash before returning to work." - This sentence needs attention.
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"Despite the publicity around the find, Balch refused to disclose the location of the cave for fear of safety of amateur explorers." - The end of this sentence could be better expressed.
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"excavations" - we called them "digs" - the article could explain the purpose of the excavations.
"Balch conducted excavations in conjunction with the Somerset Archaeological and Natural History Society such as Chelmscombe Cave in Cheddar Gorge." - This is another awkward sentence.
Removed a bit and reworded.  Done
"In 1906, Balch focussed on the investigation of the Iron Age cave dwellers in Wookey Hole, with other members of the Mendip Nature Research Committee they started a four-year investigation of Wookey Hole, mapping the caves, drawing finds and taking photographs." - Ditto.
 Done
"Balch was consulted by water companies who were looking for new water supplies." Why?
I've added "As an authority on the caves under the Mendip Hills", I believe they were considering looking for underground water sources - hope that's clear enough. Otherwise I might just remove the sentence all together, it's not massively important to the article, just something I found interesting. WormTT(talk)
You need to be consistent as to whether you capitalise "cathedral".
I believe it should only be a capital when a proper name (Wells Cathedral). I've taken out a redundant "the" to make it clearer, but the inconsistency does match Wells Cathedral's article. WormTT(talk)
"The museum has grown significantly by 1928 so Balch persuaded William Wyndham to purchase a property for the museum on the cathedral green." - Tense.
 Done
"The museum was relocated in 1932 there, becoming the Wells and Mendip Museum." - This sentence wants rearranging.
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"Balch was awarded the freedom of the city of Wells" - Capitalise city.
 Done
Looking back now at the Lead, to see if it adequately summarises the article, the words "underground labyrinths" look out of place and anyway isn't mentioned in the body of the text.
removed  Done
I think "Wells post office", in the lead and later, should be capitalised.
 Done throughout.
"he gained scholarship to" - Word missing.
 Done
"Balch took up caving after attending a talk by William Boyd Dawkins," - I think this statement is inaccurate.
You're right, fixed.  Done
"Balch lead a number of expeditions through the caves near Wookey Hole, discovering and mapping many caves." - For a start, it should be "led", but what does the sentence mean? Was he acting as a guide for parties of novices or what?
Exploration and documentation, I've changed it to exploration which I think is more clear for the lead.
The article uses the name "Wookey Hole" in several places, but you need to make it clear whether you are referring to the village or the cavern.
 Done
"... he founded the Wells Museum, largely including his own collection of artefacts." - This could be better expressed.
That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:41, 2 September 2016 (UTC)


### GA Criteria
The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
The article uses several reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research. 
The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed. 
The article is neutral. 
The article is stable. 
The single image is relevant, has a suitable caption, and is in the public domain. 
Final assessment - I believe this article reaches the GA criteria. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 13:54, 3 September 2016 (UTC)