# Talk:Naoum Mokarzel

IMO, the lead could stand expansion to two or three paragraphs, as it is a reasonably long article. (t · c) buidhe 03:20, 19 January 2021 (UTC)

You're right buidhe, done _Elias Z. (talkallam) 09:54, 22 March 2021 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Naoum Mokarzel/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Whiteguru (talk · contribs) 05:04, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

Starts GA Review; the review will follow the same sections of the Article.   --Whiteguru (talk) 05:04, 13 March 2021 (UTC)

 


### Observations
Consider (Lede): print a number of books and to circulate Maronitism and Lebanese nationalism Since the link for Maronitism goes to Maronite politics it might be better to put this in the text instead of Maronitism.
 done, thanks _Elias Z. (talkallam) 12:31, 19 March 2021 (UTC)  Done
Reference 20 goes to 404.
 all references reviewed, thanks _Elias Z. (talkallam) 12:31, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
Broken link to article fixed _Elias Z. (talkallam) 06:46, 22 March 2021 (UTC)  Done
Mokarzel represented the Lebanon League of Progress in the Paris Peace Conference of 1919 where he advocated French tutelage over Mount Lebanon.  What is the source for this statement?
 Same ref as those at the end of the passage, I added them at the end of the pasage. _Elias Z. (talkallam) 12:31, 19 March 2021 (UTC)  Done


### Religion and sectarianism
The first paragraph in this section is too long without citations. (It looks like original research.) Put some more references in sentences.
Citations from original articles by MK added. _Elias Z. (talkallam) 07:21, 22 March 2021 (UTC)  Done
With respect to Mokarzel's conflict with the Maronite clergy, we need to have some reference to their control over the ignorant, uneducated, backward Syrian women in the US (in this section; I know there is a following section on Female literacy).
I added a passage about clergy meddling in women affairs and a line about child and forced marriage. _Elias Z. (talkallam) 07:21, 22 March 2021 (UTC)  Done
as immodest if they became writers of gave public lectures --> should be writers or gave public lectures  Done
Fixed by George _Elias Z. (talkallam) 07:21, 22 March 2021 (UTC)
This is a very well referenced and researched article.

(Comment) I am not altogether sure about Arabic page numbers in references.
Yep. It's like Roman numerals in some book preambles.  _Elias Z. (talkallam) 07:21, 22 March 2021 (UTC) 


### Final
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Can we attend to the matters above?       --Whiteguru (talk) 04:04, 19 March 2021 (UTC)
Hi Whiteguru I think I addressed all of your points. Please let me know when you deliberate. _Elias Z. (talkallam) 12:50, 22 March 2021 (UTC)

 
 Passed