# Talk:Moses Gray (American football)

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Reviewer: WikiOriginal-9 (talk · contribs) 22:17, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Notes
I added an image
The infobox doesn't follow the proper team chronology right now.
So, should I say "Titans (1961)* - Warriors (1961) - Titans (1961-1962) - Warriors (1962)"?
yes, they released him. Its not like nfl europe where they put people on the exempt list or whatever. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:15, 25 October 2023 (UTC)
I'm not sure those highlights are notable enough for the infobox.
Removed.
Were you able to find any more info on his college career like stats or honors?
Wasn't able to.
"213th overall" change to 214th
Done.
"In his sophomore and junior seasons, he averaged 18 minutes played per game" Maybe I missed something but I think the source is only talking about his junior year?
Changed.
"before seeing more action as a senior" The source used for that is before the season started
Changed to saying he was a starter as a senior with a new ref.
"afterwards was sent to the Indianapolis Warriors" I don't see Gray mentioned in the source
Its in part 2.
"and retired afterwards" I don't see in that source where he "retired"
Changed the phrasing some.
ref 1 says he was born in Rock Castle, Goochland County.
I read it say "Moses was born on April 12th, 1937, in Goochland, VA" - where do you see Rock Castle?
sry i meant ref 3 the moses gray papers WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:15, 25 October 2023 (UTC)
@WikiOriginal-9: I just changed it to "Goochland County" BeanieFan11 (talk) 00:21, 25 October 2023 (UTC)
ref 1 says he furthered his education at Michigan and the General Motors Institute (whatever that us) if we can find any more info about that
I'm not seeing it, could you provide a quote?
oops sry i mean ref 3
Added.
Should we link telethon if that's actually what it means?
Linked.
"becoming in 1972 the state's" comma after 1972
Added.
Link Cambria County in body
Linked.
That's all I think. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 22:17, 19 October 2023 (UTC)

@WikiOriginal-9: BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:47, 24 October 2023 (UTC)
All points have been addressed. Passing the article. Nice work! WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 00:30, 25 October 2023 (UTC)