# Talk:Camping (Parks and Recreation)

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk) 21:28, 4 April 2011 (UTC)
Adding a quick note to say that I will review. I'll give the article a read through now and add any points that come up below. Miyagawa (talk) 21:28, 4 April 2011 (UTC)

Cultural references: Can you have a look to see if you merge a couple of sentences into one another, as at the moment it feels like its a list with the line breaks removed. The actual content itself is good, just the flow needs to be looked at.
Yeah, this is always a challenge, given the nature of these sections. I tried to rework it a bit, placed everything in order so that the related bits are together (mostly Tom/tent stuff in the first paragraph, Leslie stuff in the second) to make this flow better. Let me know if it needs more work. — Hunter Kahn 03:06, 5 April 2011 (UTC)
Ratings: Would it be possible to change defeated in the final sentence, perhaps to "beat" or similar - its just that defeated is quite a prominent word in the previous sentence.
Done. — Hunter Kahn 03:06, 5 April 2011 (UTC)
Images: Is it possible to add a low quality screencap from the episode to the infobox with a fair use rationale?
I had an image, but it's now up for deletion, so I just nominated the episode without a photo. Perhaps there is a better image that can be used with a fair use rationale. (I thought about maybe the inside of the tent, to actually show all Tom's luxury items, maybe.) Maybe you can help me identify one: after reading the article, is there anything in particular you feel could be illustrated to help further the readers' understanding of the episode? — Hunter Kahn 03:06, 5 April 2011 (UTC)
Good job so far, apart from those few issues everything checks out. I'll place the article on hold for the moment. Miyagawa (talk) 22:02, 4 April 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the review! — Hunter Kahn 03:06, 5 April 2011 (UTC)
GA review (see here for criteria)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 

I understand completely about the image, it's only a nice to have because there are no free use images available. Happy to grade this as a GA following those improvements. Good job. Miyagawa (talk) 20:39, 5 April 2011 (UTC)