# Talk:Brooklyn Manor station

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:42, 9 September 2019 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for taking this up. I actually didn't make any substantial contributions to this particular article, so many of these issues are not of my origin. In any case, thanks so much for taking this up. I really appreciate it.--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 17:36, 11 September 2019 (UTC)

Comments

Lead is a teeny bit short for my liking, you have where it was, when it opened and when it closed, might there be something from the middle of the History section worthy of noting in the lead?
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
Where is the ownership (in the infobox) referenced?
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"Street Level	-" -> Street level, and should be an en-dash, not a hyphen.
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"The platforms were constructed from wood, as were most other stations constructed " constructed .. constructed... repetitive.
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
"Most of the current station..." see WP:PRECISELANG relating to the use of terms like "current".
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"The BMT's" expand BMT before you use it as an abbreviation.
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Similarly LIRR.
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"Connection was ... Connection was..." repetitive.
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"grade-crossing eliminations" what does that mean?
 Done I wiki-linked it. --Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
"Brooklyn Hills Station" you've piped to something else, our article is at Brooklyn Hills station (note small s).
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 17:36, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
" Following its opening, the..." we've lost track of which "its" you mean, presumably back to Brooklyn Manor, so needs re-stating.
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Avoid SHOUTING in the ref titles.
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One of ref 8 sources is showing as permanently dead.
@The Rambling Man: Fultonhistory.com is not working for me right now, but when it works, I will check this out.--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
"Ridership declined ..." do we have any ridership figures at all?
@The Rambling Man: I have not seen any, but will look into it.--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
" trackway.[1][3][4][19][20][21] " do we need six citations for that sentence?  See WP:CITEKILL.
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
"In the 1950s following " I think a comma before "following" is needed.
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"by the MTA in" expand MTA before using it as an abbreviation.
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"on June 27, 2010 due " comma after 2010.
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"Few remnants of the station site remaining today." incomplete sentence, and see PRECISELANG again ("today").
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
Link Rockaway Beach Branch first time in the prose.
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 18:18, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
And there's no need for Rockaway Beach Branch to be a see also, it's linked at least twice in the article (prose/infobox).
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 17:36, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
Replace the spaced hyphen in the external link with a spaced en-dash.
 Done--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 17:36, 11 September 2019 (UTC)
That's it for my first pass review, a few minor issues so I'll put the nomination on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 09:33, 11 September 2019 (UTC)

Kew Gardens 613 all good, the fultonhistory URL works for me so I've unmarked it as being dead, also linked LIRR first time round, but otherwise, (ridership figures notwithstanding, it'd be GREAT if we could find some but I understand the challenges...) good to go for GA, so I'm promoting.  Nice work. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 07:52, 12 September 2019 (UTC)
@The Rambling Man: Thanks so much. If I ever find any, I will make sure to add them.--Kew Gardens 613 (talk) 11:34, 12 September 2019 (UTC)