# Talk:2004–05 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season

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This review is transcluded from Talk:2004–05 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 20:22, 23 January 2019 (UTC)

Will do NoahTalk 20:22, 23 January 2019 (UTC)


### Review
#### Lead
The first sentence in the lead has multiple issues. "The 2004–05 South-West Indian Ocean cyclone season was a near average season, but it began unusually early[...]" seems incorrect. Maybe change the second part of that to "despite beginning unusually early". Also, should be "on August 30" instead of "in".
Changed to your wording. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
In the second lead sentence, you should add a number for depressions since all 18 disturbances did not become TDs.
Added. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
I would change "Bento attained its high intensity at a low latitude" to peak. Additionally, I would remove "areas" after land.
Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"The Australian Bureau of Meteorology (BoM) named the system Adeline, and once the storm crossed 90°E, the MFR renamed the storm Juliet, which would reach maximum sustained winds of 220 km/h (140 mph), making it a very intense tropical cyclone." Sentence should be split in my opinion. Wording also needs fixed after Juliet.
Split up and reworded. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
When did Juliet become ET and end the season? NoahTalk 23:44, 23 January 2019 (UTC)
Added. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)


#### Seasonal summary
Disturbances and depressions are two separate items, not the same thing. NoahTalk 23:44, 23 January 2019 (UTC)
Split and changed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)


#### Systems
"and the JTWC classified it as Tropical Cyclone 03S" Probably should be changed to "with the JTWC classifying it as Tropical Cyclone 03S"
I'm not a fan of the "...with the... [gerund]". It happened on the same date, so "and" is correct. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"and quickly intensified" should be changed to "while quickly intensifying"
Changed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"An area of convection developed west of Diego Garcia January 16" Add the word "on" before the date.
Oops, added. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"On January 20, the MFR upgraded the system to Tropical Storm Ernest east of the Comoros." add a comma after Ernest
Added "to the" instead. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"On the next day, Ernest turned southeast and made landfall in extreme southern Madagascar near Itampolo." Add a comma after Madagascar
Done. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
In the report to the WMO, the MFR noted that ""for a tropical depression system of such intensity not to be named is unprecedented in the recent history of the basin." Has an extra quotation mark
Removed extra quote mark. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"After a period of inactivity lasting about three weeks, a tropical disturbance formed on March 19 west of Diego Garcia" Add a comma after 19
Added "to the". I don't like the comma breaking up such a short narrative. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"The near-equatorial trough spawned a circulation in the Australian region on April 2 east of the Cocos Islands." needs a comma after 2
"to the" added ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"On April 5, Adeline crossed 90°E into the South-West Indian Ocean[...]" After the E, add a comma and change into to "entering"
I disagree. The storm crossed into the basin by way of crossing that latitude line. I think the wording is fine. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"The cyclone intensified further to an intense tropical cyclone" Change to "The cyclone intensified further, becoming an intense tropical cyclone"
Does it need the "becoming"? ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
Grammatically, it is fine as is. It might have better flow if it were becoming. NoahTalk 02:35, 25 January 2019 (UTC)
"The JTWC estimated slightly higher 1 minute winds of 2300 km/h (145 mph)" Those are some extreme winds there
Lol oops, fixed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"Tracking towards the southeast, the low experience strong deep-level wind shear which kept most of the convection displaced from the center of circulation." should be experienced
Past tense-ified. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
"On August 31, convection managed to develop around the west and southwestern portions of the low before[30] and was designated as Tropical Depression 01." Before?
Ah stray wording, fixed. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
Those are the issues I discovered with the article. For some reason, I feel like I may have missed some issues. I wanted to give you a chance to correct these first before deciding whether or not to ask for a second set of eyes. NoahTalk 23:44, 23 January 2019 (UTC)

Thank you for the thorough review! I beliieve I addressed all of your comments. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  15:59, 24 January 2019 (UTC)
I will read through it again tomorrow. I was pressed for time today. NoahTalk 02:35, 25 January 2019 (UTC)
Thanks again for reviewing! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  16:25, 25 January 2019 (UTC)