# Talk:Ardeshir Tarapore

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Link works and seems useful. Dhtwiki (talk) 09:02, 30 November 2016 (UTC)

Some observations:

Is there no more on his WWII experience?
IMO the "Battle of Chawinda" section needs an initial sentence introducing the war, and possibly the reason for it.
IMO, immediately after this, you need to state briefly what I Corps' plan was, that Poona Horse was a part of I Corps, and where PH's plan fitted into I Corps' plan.
I have been on the bold side with my edits, so could you check them carefully. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:26, 30 May 2018 (UTC)

@Gog the Mild: Your edits are excellent. Thanks for your comments, I'll work on them. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 06:21, 1 June 2018 (UTC)
@Krishna Chaitanya Velaga: No problem; and thank you. I assume that you are going for GA with this, so I tried to pitch my copy edit at that level. Good luck with it. Gog the Mild (talk) 08:55, 1 June 2018 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Ardeshir Tarapore/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Auntieruth55 (talk · contribs) 16:37, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

I'll start this in a day or two.  auntieruth (talk) 16:37, 18 June 2018 (UTC)
Thanks for taking up the nomination. I'll be looking forward for your comments. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga
(talk • mail) 16:44, 18 June 2018 (UTC)

minor tweaks on verb agreement and clarity here
this sentence doesn't make sense to me: However, this operation failed as the presence of Pakistani troops was reported locals.  auntieruth (talk) 14:54, 19 June 2018 (UTC)
@Auntieruth55: Thanks for the review. I've amended the sentence to be clear. Kindly take a look. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 16:37, 26 June 2018 (UTC)
@Auntieruth55: Thanks for review. Please update the article class on the talk page. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 03:19, 30 June 2018 (UTC)
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: