# Talk:Ambivalence (Neon Genesis Evangelion episode)

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Nominator: TeenAngels1234 (talk · contribs) 07:44, 13 December 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: Tintor2 (talk · contribs) 22:28, 16 February 2025 (UTC)
I will review this article.Tintor2 (talk) 22:28, 16 February 2025 (UTC)

Lead
First of all. Wikilink Tensai Okamura.
Avoid repeating the same title in the first sentences of each paragraphs. Try replacing it with something like "the episode"
The final paragraph contradicts itself. Was the reception positive, negative or mixed?
Plot
Who is screaming in the end?
Production
i feel like "In 1993, Gainax wrote a presentation document for Neon Genesis Evangelion entitled New Century Evangelion (tentative name) Proposal (新世紀エヴァンゲリオン (仮) 企画書, Shinseiki Evangelion (kari) kikakusho) that contained synopses of the planned episodes.[1][2] The Proposal was published in 1994.[3][4] For the first twelve episodes, the company followed the proposal's schedule with few minor script differences.[5][6] The Proposal document had an American-built Eva-01.[7]" is used in most episodes. How about rewording it or trimming it?
Don't use "()". Try instead "also called otaku" unless it's a quote.
Maybe mentioning the Hikari cameo in the plot would make the prodcution section information more relevant.
Themes
I suggest rewording the quotes if the original source is on another language.
Reception
Every paragraph starts with a different review. I suggest reorganizing it to make generalizations.
That's all.
@TeenAngels1234: Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 23:07, 16 February 2025 (UTC)

@Tintor2: Okay. I think I did everything. Thanks for the review. --TeenAngels1234 (talk) 21:09, 22 February 2025 (UTC)
@TeenAngels1234: Good work.Tintor2 (talk) 21:27, 22 February 2025 (UTC)