# Talk:Al-Muhallab ibn Abi Sufra

Forgot to mention in the edit summary, the previous version of this article has been replaced by User:Al Ameer son/Muhallab. —Al Ameer (talk) 14:37, 8 April 2019 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Al-Muhallab ibn Abi Sufra/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Cplakidas (talk · contribs) 18:33, 19 May 2019 (UTC)
Will start this soon. Constantine   ✍  18:33, 19 May 2019 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 

"between the mid-640s and his death and served successive terms" recommend splitting after "death"
"against the Persians" link to the Sasanian Empire
"in Iraq and Khurasan in 683–684" add "during the Second Muslim Civil War" for context and for introducing the term
"switched allegiance to Caliph" -> "switched allegiance to the Umayyad caliph"
"Al-Hajjaj made al-Muhallab governor of Khurasan in 698 and from there, he recommenced the Arab conquests in Transoxiana, leading a two-year-long siege of the Kish fortress" recommend splitting after "698", and "fortress of Kish" is better
"in circa 632." you might want to consider using the {{circa}} template.
"from the "Azd Sarat", which was based in western Arabia" either "from the "Azd Sarat" tribe, which...", or "from the "Azd Sarat", who...
"Khurasan and Iraq ultimately came under the suzerainty of the anti-Umayyad, Mecca-based caliph, Abd Allah ibn al-Zubayr (r. 683–692)," first, use the {{reign}} template; second and optional, perhaps it might be useful to note the dependence of Khurasan from Iraq, like "Iraq, and Khurasan with it, came under...".
"at the Battle of Maskin.[20][8]" put the references in numerical order
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):  d (copyvio and plagiarism): 
High-quality sources have been used throughout. No close paraphrasing detected based on the EI article and a spotcheck of the other sources.
Add locations to Shaban (1970), Wellhausen (1927), and Wink (2002). Wellhausen also needs an OCLC.
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 
From my knowledge of the subject, and with the EI article as a guide, it looks complete, and follows WP:SS. I don't see any major reference work or study on the period missing, apart perhaps from Kennedy's Great Arab Conquests, which has a few comments on Muhallab, especially his siege of Kish and his (and Yazid's) status among the Azd. I recommend adding him (I can send you the relevant passages).
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 

@Al Ameer son: I've made a first pass, looks really good. I've highlighted any issues I found, and made a few suggestions, above. Cheers, Constantine   ✍  07:34, 26 May 2019 (UTC)

@Cplakidas: Thanks for reviewing the article. I’ve addressed all of the aforementioned issues and have taken your helpful suggestions. I don't have full access to the Kennedy book that you've recommended, so please send those relevant passages. Cheers, —Al Ameer (talk) 02:12, 27 May 2019 (UTC)
@Cplakidas: I've added the relevant material from Kennedy. Thanks again ;) Please revise any recent changes/additions as you see fit. --Al Ameer (talk) 18:16, 27 May 2019 (UTC)
@Al Ameer son: Looks good, made some tweaks. Happy to pass this, well done :). Constantine   ✍  19:19, 27 May 2019 (UTC)