# Talk:2018 Paris ePrix

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 16:49, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

Might as well do this one, too. Courcelles (talk) 16:49, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

" unsuccessfully tried to overtake him. "  Needs another word.
"clinch his third victory of the season."  There's a lot of names before this his, and they're all male.
"Construction of the circuit took around six days with workers using 5,000 t (11,000,000 lb) of material shipped to the Port"  As a statistic, the GA criteria require a direct citation.  Also, why are we using pounds and not, as the French would, kilograms?
"starting order was determined " -> "starting order for the ePrix was determined"
"first group's top five drivers."  Given each group only had five drivers, this is a "duh" thing to explicitly say.
"which meant everyone had to use 4% for the rest of the ePrix"  If they had 40%, why could they only use 4%?
Other than Abt, who were the other two drivers with FanBoost?
"I wanted to win this year it was clearly Paris" is missing the closing quotation marks
Everything else looks fine. Courcelles (talk) 17:19, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

@Courcelles: All of the above suggestions have been implemented. The winners of the FanBoost can be found in the first paragraph of the race sub-section. MWright96 (talk) 18:15, 28 July 2018 (UTC)
Missed that, sorry.  Promoted. Courcelles (talk) 18:43, 28 July 2018 (UTC)