# Talk:Abyss (roller coaster)

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Reviewer: ChrisGualtieri (talk · contribs) 17:35, 1 January 2014 (UTC)
I'll take this one. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 17:35, 1 January 2014 (UTC)
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Comments: I'll be brief again. The lead is missing the development and construction details. The image of the coaster is not the Abyss, this should be fixed or removed as it is misleading. History has some errors with the prose "would be manufactured" instead of "was" and some issue with "seven, 7-day weeks". It seems that an unexplained or possibly a pun is used for its opening date of Friday the 13th; if it is a pun from the marketing, please explain it otherwise remove it. Another possible pun is "filled a void" in the next paragraph, this should be altered. Mark Shaw's proclamation of it "the most exhilarating ride" seems a bit questionable as he is not a neutral or third party. The ride experience section has some jargon in roller coaster terminology with "dive loop" and "air-time hill" which reduces the accessibility of the text. Prose errors in the Reception section include "He describes", which should be "described" because he is not currently (presently) describing. I dislike the "their legs were shaking..." addition, snip it short and cut "Stated" and just make it "Austrian Associated Press commended the ride's..." Reference 17 is a wordpress, but seems acceptable. Ref 19 is a youtube source, but it is acceptable from Today Tonight. I believe more on the design and development of the coaster is needed, as the article is still sparse in details. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 18:28, 2 January 2014 (UTC)
@ChrisGualtieri: Thanks for this review as well. I have addressed most of the issues here. I have explained air-time hill in the article, however, I am not sure of a good way to explain some of the other terms without detracting from the flow of the overall article. I think all jargon has been linked at its first mention in the article and in many previous cases that has sufficed. The second thing is you suggested the information about the ride's design and development should be expanded. Unfortunately I can't think of anything else to add here that can be reliably sourced. If there is anything else you would like me to modify, please let me know. Themeparkgc  Talk  00:32, 3 January 2014 (UTC)
I don't want to ruin the prose for the terminology to be really clear. I'll check it over now. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 00:42, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

The changes are good and I believe meets the good article criteria. It is not as comprehensive as I believe it could be, but I do think that this highlights all the major points of the construction, design, appearance and reception of the roller coaster. Such an article would be a fitting addition to a print encyclopedia and as such this article meets the GA criteria. Passed. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 00:48, 3 January 2014 (UTC)

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