# Talk:Alex + Ada

Don't have either the subject knowledge or the time to review this for GA at the moment, but I saw it on GAN. Looks pretty good overall, but I am suspicious of the sentence beginning Luna's simplistic artwork.... I am for some reason unable to access the sources at present (probably my connection), but are they two reviews that happen not to like the artwork? If we have two reviews that state they don't like it, then name the two reviewers inline, or find another source that directly states that this is a "frequent point of criticism", as the balance of sources at present seems like the majority (three sources, including the article's two principal sources) like it.
I know with films this problem is easy to fix, as RT and other review aggregators regularly pick out points that reviewers tended to like and dislike -- can something similar be done with comic books?
Hijiri 88 (聖やや) 06:22, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

Sources 19 and 20 were reviews that did not like the art, but even the reviewers who did like it (1, 4, 21) described it as "simplistic" or something synonymous. Argento Surfer (talk) 14:14, 23 June 2016 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Alex + Ada/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:19, 24 June 2016 (UTC)


### Infobox
Please remove any of the following unused parameters, not unless valid and cited information can be added to them:

Done Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)


### Lead
#### Paragraph 1
"They began work on the series in January 2013, and 15 issues were published by Image Comics between November 2013 and June 2015." --> "The duo began work on the series in January 2013, before publishing 15 issues through Image Comics between November 2013 and June 2015."
"The series has been collected into three trade paperbacks." --> "The series has since been collected into three trade paperbacks."


#### Paragraph 2
"The series received positive reviews from critics who compared it to other popular science fiction stories, although Luna's artwork was sometimes criticized." --> Why was Luna's artwork sometimes criticized
Done Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)


### Publication history
#### Development
"Jonathan Luna had previously created comics with his brother Joshua, but was exhausted after six straight years of work." --> No source
"Inspired by a TED Talk, he decided to take a sabbatical." --> No source
Both of these points came from the same source, which is at the end of the paragraph. Do you want me to cite each sentence?
No, that won't be necessary. Thanks anyway; I understand now. Carbrera (talk) 21:55, 26 June 2016 (UTC)
"Inspired by a TED Talk, he decided to take a sabbatical." --> "Inspired by a TED Talk, he decided to take a break from working." (Not everyone may know what a sabbatical is.)
What year was Star Bright and the Looking Glass published in?
"Beginning January 2013, they discussed the project for three or four months and created an outline for the whole story.[1][4]" --> "After initializing the concept in January 2013, the two discussed the project for three or four months before creating an outline for the whole story.[1][4]"
done Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
"Luna wrote the first draft of issue one, then the two worked together on rewrites.[4]" --> "Luna wrote the first draft of issue one, while the remaining issues were written by both of them.[4]"
Rewrote for clarity. Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)


#### Publication
"The series has been collected into three trade paperbacks, each containing five issues." --> No source
Source added. Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)


### Plot
All good! :)
Woo hoo! Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)


### Reception
#### Paragraph 1
Please remove the wikilink to "Comic Book Round Up"
"Customer reviews have also been favorable, with scores of 4.22/5[11] and 4.4/5[12] according to Goodreads and Amazon respectively." --> Not necessary; please remove both of the statements and sources accordingly
Rest is great!!
Done Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)


### References
Please change "Reflist" to "Reflist|30em"; thanks


### End of GA Review:
On hold for seven days to address the issues I have mentioned above. Thanks for the review and good luck! Cheers, Carbrera (talk) 01:02, 24 June 2016 (UTC).

All addressed except for the first couple points in development, pending clarification. Thanks! Argento Surfer (talk) 12:44, 24 June 2016 (UTC)
Thanks so much for addressing everything! It all looks great and will be passing now! Fantastic work! Carbrera (talk) 22:01, 26 June 2016 (UTC).