# Talk:2021 Go North West strike

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 16:39, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

I will be taking a look at this! — GhostRiver 16:39, 16 October 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lede
"into excepting deals" → "into accepting deals"
Done.
"without an agreement. Subsequently, the strike continued for several more weeks." → "without an agreement, and the strike continued for several more weeks."
Done.
The national advertisements don't seem to be mentioned in the body
Fixed.
It's also not entirely clear in the body that this "bullying" occured during one-on-one meetings
Fixed phrasing in the lede.


### Background
#### Go North West
Replace parentheses with commas around "a bus operator subsidiary of British transportation group FirstGroup"
Done.
Comma after "bus depot in Cheetham, Manchester" per MOS:GEOCOMMA
Done.
Delink "United Kingdom", "London", and "England" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done.


#### Hostilities between union and company
"management was" and "management were" used interchangeably in the first two sentences
Fixed.
"an odious slight of hand" → "an odious sleight of hand" per source
Done.
Quote at the end of the first paragraph is quite long and tipped off Earwig's copyvio search. Maybe have the second sentence paraphrased and keep the direct quote about changes being long overdue
Done.
Move the parentheticals from after "senior union representative" to after "at Queens Road"
Done.
Add spaces around ellipses in the second paragraph quote per MOS:ELLIPSIS
Done.
Delink "solidarity" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done.
"second day of protesting" → "second day of protests"
Done.
"indicated that he would intervene in the protests."
Done.
"The same month as these protests were occurring," → "While these protests were occurring,"
Done.


#### Union members vote to strike
"On that day, in a report from Unite," → "By that time, a report from Unite indicated that"
Done.
"that protected" → "to protect"
Done.


### Course of the strike
#### Early strike activities
"The strike coincided with an unrelated strike in Greater London that involved bus drivers (also members of Unite) working for several subsidiaries of the RATP Group." → "The Manchester strike coincided with an unrelated strike by Unite-affiliated bus drivers in Greater London working for several subsidiaries of the RATP Group."
Done.
Remove "additionally" before "on 2 March" so that two sentences in a row don't start with that word
Done.
Delink "heath and safety" per MOS:OVERLINK
Done.
"than COVID-19 restrictions would allow" → "than pandemic restrictions would allow"
Done.
Replace parentheticals with commas around "who had recently been involved in a strike of their own"
Done.


#### Discussions break down and strike continues
"crossed the picket line and returned to work at that point." → "already crossed the picket line and returned to work."
Done.
"over a hundred" → "over 100" per MOS:NUM
Done.
Replace parentheticals with commas around "the General Secretary of the Trades Union Congress"
Done.
"the striking drivers lead" → "the striking drivers led"
Done.
"that tareted" → "that targeted"
Done.


#### End of the strike
"a Unite representatives" either remove "a" or make "representatives" singular
Done.


### Aftermath
"the company guaranteed" → "Go North West guaranteed"
Done.


### References
Good


### General comments
Both pictures are properly licensed and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig score comes up a little high due to attributed direct quotes
Mostly minor typos and MOS things. Putting on hold for now, please feel free to ping me with questions. — GhostRiver 17:09, 16 October 2021 (UTC)

GhostRiver Hey, just wanted to ping you and let you know that I've made some changes to the article that address your review. Thanks for starting this review, and if there are any further comments, questions, or concerns about the article, please reach out. -JJonahJackalope (talk) 17:48, 16 October 2021 (UTC)
Looks good now, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 17:51, 16 October 2021 (UTC)