# Talk:2017 Monaco ePrix

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Reviewer: Bcschneider53 (talk · contribs) 16:11, 30 December 2017 (UTC)
I'll take this one. Comments may not come in for a few days though. Hold me accountable if I forget about this. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 16:11, 30 December 2017 (UTC)


### Lead
"All drivers elected to switch into their second cars, and Buemi kept the lead at the lap-26 restart." Two things here, 1) I assume you mean they all changed cars under the safety car? and 2) is the hyphen in "lap-26" necessary? I've never used it in any of my NASCAR race reports...
Yes, all the drivers switched into the second under safety car conditions; removed the hyphen. MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)
"The result meant Buemi moved further ahead" Can we just say, "The result moved Buemi further ahead" to simplify a bit?
Reworded. MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)


### Background
I was at first a bit confused when I saw di Grassi wasn't concerned about the championship, that is until I clicked on the ref and saw the context. Perhaps adding his quote, "It’s very early to be talking about the championship. We’re [on] round five, there’s another eight to go" would help?
Added the said quote. MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)


### Practice and qualifying
"Unlike the preceding four races, the Friday shakedown session was not held." Any reason why? I know Monaco's F1 practice sessions are run on Thursday for various reasons but a casual reader might not know that.
Despite my very best efforts, the information specifying why exactly there was no shakedown session is not available to my knowledge. MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)


### Race
"The field settled down for the next six laps with nothing notable of note occurring." 'Notable of note' sounds like something from the Department of the Redundancy Department; I think 'nothing notable occurring' is fine here.
 Done MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)
"Elsewhere, Gutiérrez was investigated by the stewards for an unsafe pit stop release but elected not to penalise the driver." Not a fan of the passive voice here; makes it seem as Gutiérrez elected not to hand out a penalty. I'd suggest "the stewards investigated Gutiérrez..."
 Done MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)


### Post-race
"The top three drivers appeared on the podium to collect their trophies and in a later press conference." Something seems incomplete with the "press conference" part of the sentence here.
 Done MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)
Minor issues here, but an excellent job overall once again. You may have potential for a featured topic here. On hold. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 18:04, 2 January 2018 (UTC)

@Bcschneider53: Thank you Ben. I have put in place the suggestions you placed here and have made my own changes to improve the prose. MWright96 (talk) 19:07, 2 January 2018 (UTC)
@MWright96: No problem. If you're interested, I currently have Leigh Diffey's article at GAN, though as always, no sweat if you're busy. I'll pass this article. Keep up the good work! --Bcschneider53 (talk) 19:26, 2 January 2018 (UTC)
@Bcschneider53: Appreciate the offer, but I am currently busy with another project at the moment. If Diffey's article has not been reviewed by the time I've done, I'll gladly review it. MWright96 (talk) 20:11, 2 January 2018 (UTC)