# Talk:Bismarck-class corvette

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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 00:03, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

Taking this one on. Courcelles (talk) 00:03, 28 July 2018 (UTC)
Missing a word in "and 6.18 to 6.3 m (20.3 to 20.7 ft)."
Good catch
"one pinnace,"  Dab link there
Fixed
"Stein had twelve Gneisenau had fourteen"  Missing comma
Fixed - there was a time I used too many commas. I may have over-corrected ;)
"the German torpedo-boat force had increased to the size that Blücher could fill both roles"  Might be wrong, but sure feels like we're missing a "no longer" in this sentence.
Whoops!
"sinking her and killing most of her crew."  Might want to be more specific about which ship sank.
I had wondered if that was clear enough when I wrote it
"A strong storm surprised the crew, who raised, through a communication problem between the commander and engine room crew, raised anchor and tried to get the vessel underway."  Two "raised"s
Fixed
As usual, nothing but some minor issues. Courcelles (talk) 00:23, 28 July 2018 (UTC)
Thanks again, Courcelles! Parsecboy (talk) 10:13, 28 July 2018 (UTC)
Nicely done, promoted. Courcelles (talk) 15:20, 28 July 2018 (UTC)

I altered this sentence under SMS Stein: " all of the other Bismarck-class corvettes had at least one deployment aboard." in two ways- first, to correct spelling of "aboard" to "abroad", clearly what is intended, and second to add the word "full" before "deployment", as a clarification since the passage immediately goes on to describe a voyage to China, which is abroad, but not a full term of service away from Germany. A slightly more specific form of words seemed in order, and could be achieved with one word. Random noter (talk) 02:26, 12 January 2024 (UTC)

Fine by me - of course I knew what I meant (I am in my own head, after all!), but I can see how that could be unclear. Parsecboy (talk) 13:51, 12 January 2024 (UTC)