# Talk:1st Guards Breakthrough Artillery Division

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:33, 27 September 2021 (UTC)

Comments

Lead is too brief, spending 75% of the time talking about alt names and nothing about the history or achievements or anything of the division.
Where are the decorations referenced?
"Anti-Tank (Tank Destroyer) " where they really called both or is this an explanatory note?
"9 November in " worth reiterating the year.
"received the Glukhov honorific on 31 August.[2]" what does this mean?  The link is to a town in Ukraine.
The "Offensive"s should all be "offensive"s.
"Dresden.[5][4]" ref order.
"It was assigned to the... " onwards is not referenced.
"1942–May" etc, spaced en-dashes for all these kinds of ranges.
Ref 7 is a bare URL, needs proper citation formatting to avoid linkrot.
Ref 8 could use a language parameter and ideally a translation title.
ISBNs could be consistently formatted.
That's it for now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 18:00, 1 October 2021 (UTC)

J-Man11 any response to this?  The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 12:57, 6 October 2021 (UTC)
Oh sorry, I had to run out of the house that day.  I've fixed most of the issues.  Some things you said were slightly confusing, but I did fix most. J-Man11 (talk) 13:16, 6 October 2021 (UTC)