# Talk:Avalanche United

This review is transcluded from Talk:Avalanche United/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Wetrorave (talk · contribs) 20:53, 18 June 2021 (UTC)

One more review for the day


### Infobox
Add the city and country where Studio 159 is located, in accordance with style guidelines of T:Ia#studio
Use Singles template here


### Lead
"I Am the Avalanche. I Surrender Records released the album on" > "I Am the Avalanche, released by I Surrender Records on"
"self-titled debut album" > "eponymous debut album"
"activity by the band slowed." > "the band's activity slowed."
"spent several months between February and July 2011 recording their next album" > "recorded Avalanche United between February and July 2011"
"features material written by Caruana and guitarist Mike Ireland." > "also features material written guitarist Mike Ireland." - since it was already mentioned that "Vocalist Vinnie Caruana went through a divorce and subsequently wrote an abundance of material.", there is no need to repeat it


### Background and production
Retitle to Background and recording
again, "self-titled debut album" > "eponymous debut album"
"they were out of the public eye for some time, the band" > "the band was of the public eye for some time, they"
"Vocalist, Vinnie" > "Vocalist Vinnie"
Change "Seattle, Washington" to simply "Seattle" and wikilink to Seattle
Wikilink New York City to New York City
"The producer, Machine," > "American musician Machine" since Brett Romnes was the producer
Wikilink mastered at "Douches mastered the album" to mastering (audio)


### Composition and lyrics
"has been described as" > "explores"
"melodic hardcore,[7] and punk rock.[8]" > "melodic hardcore and punk rock.[7][8]"
"Caruana said: "[Avalanche United] stands" > "Caruana said that it "stands"
"is about dying young." - try to expand on this sentence: how exactly do the lyrics portray "dying young"?


### Release
Good


### Reception
"added, the music" > "added that the music"
"Blare included the album on their top 50 albums of the year list." > ""Blare ranked Avalanche United as the 42th best album on their top 50 albums of the year list."


### Track listing
Good


### Personnel
Good


### References
All Blare refs are dead; add |url-status=dead to them or replace the existing |url-status parameters on them


### Conclusion
 On hold until issues are fixed—I may not be able to respond in the following days, but I swear I'll be here on Monday

@Wetrorave: Made the changes. Yeepsi (talk) 07:54, 19 June 2021 (UTC)
@Yeepsi: I've been able to come back here on Sunday anyways, so here goes the GA.  Pass. Wetrorave (talk) 02:31, 21 June 2021 (UTC)