# Talk:Angel Bakeries

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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:21, 9 May 2012 (UTC)

Okay, I'll bite - am intrigued about company articles so will take a look and make straightforward copyedits as I go and jot queries below: Casliber (talk · contribs) 01:21, 9 May 2012 (UTC)
the company has always been on the cutting edge of innovation and efficiency.  -unnecessary and impresses as promotional - let the innovations speak for themselves.
Erm, can you align the spelling of Bayit VeGan - which is right...?
Salomon Angel entered the business with his typical enterprising zeal. - somewhat effusive. Could be rendered more neutral I think.
water and flour were at a premium --> "water and flour were in short supply" (?)
Notwithstanding the emphasis on innovation and automation, Angel's challahs are still braided by hand. - sentence looking very lonely sitting there by itself - can it be tacked onto some paragraph somewhere?
Today the company, known as Angel Bakeries, owns and operates five plants: - don't use bolding in body of text. Also, can we get a date and ref for the name change?
Ovadia Angel and his team developed plant-based emulsifiers which were kosher, and later sold this new knowledge to other companies - any further information on this? This is one of the bits of the article that would be good to expand upon if possible - ditto the two hour mixer in the next segment. Any chemistry info a big plus.
 DoneThanks for starting the review. I appreciate your comments. I did the initial copyediting for tone; I'll look up more references over the next couple of days. Yoninah (talk) 09:15, 9 May 2012 (UTC)

I found a source available in Google Books snippet view which speaks about the plant-based emulsifiers. I was able to add only the little bit that I could see and use this source as a ref, but not much more. Unfortunately, my Hebrew is not good enough to look up articles on technical subjects like emulsifiers on Hebrew Google. I also could not find additional information on the 2-hour mixer. Regarding the company name change, I suspect it was in 1984, when the company went public and began expanding, but I am unable to find a ref; therefore I just left the two names in the lead, as people do call the company either way. Best, Yoninah (talk) 21:02, 13 May 2012 (UTC)
Alright, that extra smidgen of detail is helpful - and you can only add what you can. Template a'comin'. Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:22, 14 May 2012 (UTC)
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Pass or Fail:  Casliber (talk · contribs) 00:26, 14 May 2012 (UTC)
Thanks for the positive review! Yoninah (talk) 10:53, 14 May 2012 (UTC)
When will the GA icon be added to the article? Yoninah (talk) 14:04, 14 May 2012 (UTC)

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