# Talk:Aubin Grove railway station

Hello fellow Wikipedians,
I have just modified one external link on Aubin Grove railway station. Please take a moment to review my edit. If you have any questions, or need the bot to ignore the links, or the page altogether, please visit this simple FaQ for additional information. I made the following changes:

Added archive https://web.archive.org/web/20150824054125/http://www.transperth.wa.gov.au:80/timetablepdfs/Mandurah%20Line%2020120422.pdf to http://www.transperth.wa.gov.au/timetablepdfs/Mandurah%20Line%2020120422.pdf
When you have finished reviewing my changes, please set the checked parameter below to true or failed to let others know (documentation at {{Sourcecheck}}).
This message was posted before February 2018. After February 2018, "External links modified" talk page sections are no longer generated or monitored by InternetArchiveBot. No special action is required regarding these talk page notices, other than regular verification using the archive tool instructions below. Editors have permission to delete these "External links modified" talk page sections if they want to de-clutter talk pages, but see the RfC before doing mass systematic removals. This message is updated dynamically through the template {{source check}} (last update: 5 June 2024).

If you have discovered URLs which were erroneously considered dead by the bot, you can report them with this tool.
If you found an error with any archives or the URLs themselves, you can fix them with this tool.
Cheers.—InternetArchiveBot (Report bug) 05:41, 21 October 2016 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Aubin Grove railway station/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 22:58, 29 January 2022 (UTC)


### Copy changes
#### Lead section
The journey to Perth railway station is 23.8 kilometres (14.8 mi), and takes 21 minutes. — remove comma


#### Description
First paragraph is somewhat redundant to lead; consider migrating relevant refs into lead and removing
I disagree. WP:LEAD says that significant information should not appear in the lead if it is not covered in the remainder of the article.
The adjacent stations are Cockburn Central railway station towards Perth, — remove comma
three person — hyphenate


#### History
announced it would built the station — "would build"
The station was planned to relieve pressure at Cockburn Central station, which has its carparks full at 7:11am, the earliest of any Mandurah line station. — Time needs a space, e.g. 7:11 am or 7:11 a.m. See MOS:TIME.
Consider rewording the section of "early contractor involvement contractor" to space out the two instances of the word "contractor".
This increased the project's budget to $105 million, — remove comma
De-hyphenate "late-2015", "late-2016", etc.
Main Roads was reluctant to approve the closures, with them only being approved the week before the first closure. — awkward them, maybe Main Roads was reluctant to approve the closures, only doing so the week before the first closure?
...asbestos-containing material was discovered", — remove comma
10.56am — convert to colon, also see above on spacing


#### Services
every 10 minutes on peak during weekdays, — remove comma
half-hourly, or hourly — remove comma


### Referencing
Reference #2 to Google Maps should be replaced with a higher-quality map source. It may be the case that no reference is needed for something as obvious as its location. See also the advice about the first paragraph.
I decided to just remove that reference, seeing as its location is obvious enough.


### Other items
References are archived.
Earwig mostly catches quotes from Main Roads.
A {{clear}} should be added at the end of the Services section to permit the references to be full-width. (On my screen, they are not.)
The infobox needs an |alt= parameter for the image in the header. The individual images are all alt-tagged and appropriately licensed.


### Commas, commas, commas
You will notice a lot of "remove comma". This is because you are using commas where no comma is called for because there is no joining of what could otherwise be two sentences with ", and". If you take this out, and you do not have two sentences, don't put the comma back in.
Using the lead section example:

The journey to Perth railway station is 23.8 kilometres (14.8 mi), and takes 21 minutes. to {The journey to Perth railway station is 23.8 kilometres (14.8 mi). Takes 21 minutes. — N "Takes 21 minutes" is not a standalone sentence. This SHOULD read The journey to Perth railway station is 23.8 kilometres (14.8 mi) and takes 21 minutes.
But if it read The journey to Perth railway station is 23.8 kilometres (14.8 mi), and it takes 21 minutes., "It takes 21 minutes" is a separate sentence, so a comma is appropriate.


### Summary
Putting on hold, Steelkamp, for repair of the copy changes, the Google Maps reference, the clear tag and an alt for the infobox image. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 23:23, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

I have implemented all but one of your suggestions. See that comment for why. Steelkamp (talk) 11:37, 30 January 2022 (UTC)
Passing, because I think that's fair. It's not my personal choice, but it's an understandable one. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 03:18, 31 January 2022 (UTC)