# Talk:2012–13 Ivy League men's basketball season

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 08:29, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Comments

Opening sentence of lead has 45 words.  Too long.
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  12:20, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"that ensnared defending" a little bit dramatic.
ensnared -> involved.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  12:21, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"defending champion Harvard.[1]  Harvard won" a little too soon to repeat Harvard for good prose flow.
I have rearranged the first sentence.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  12:43, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"ensnared Kyle Casey and Brandyn Curry" again, too much.  Perhaps "involved"?
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:10, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"the CBS Sports Network.:[5]" odd colon.
Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:11, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"5 Ivy League Player.." five.  "6 Rookie..." six.  etc.
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:14, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"('89)" does this mean "(1989)"?
Clarified.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:29, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"third-team selection in 2012, was selected " repetitive use of "select".
Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:31, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"Each week the Ivy League selects a" -> selected.
Updated.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:34, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Not really, the sentence still says they select "a" player...  The Rambling Man (talk) 16:36, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
No key for position, class?
Added.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:49, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Not a requirement of GA but it would be nice for the table to be accessible per MOS:DTT.
It's not sortable so you don't need to relink Hummer.
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:40, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
It says "a player of the week" but there are frequently more than one winner each week.
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:42, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"(Jr., G - Brookfield, Ill.)" etc, what does this all mean?  And you should use en-dashes here instead of hyphens (per WP:DASH).
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:27, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"its 2011–12 Men's All-District Teams," shouldn't that be 12/13?
fixed artifact from copy/paste.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:57, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
What's "Big Ten"?
fixed artifact from copy/paste.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  13:57, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
In District I you link New England, but in District II you link nothing.  Be consistent.
Unlinked New England.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:01, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Don't use hash in place of "number" or similar, per WP:HASH.
O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:24, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Why is the text in the NCAA Tournament table so small?  And what is the point of it being sortable?
The format is copied from other conferences for consistency.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:10, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
"68-62" en-dash.
Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:16, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Refs 5 and 11, remove SHOUTING.
fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:13, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Ref 21, en-dash.
I don't usually do this in titles, but per your request this has been done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:18, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Normally refs for PDFs have format=PDF in them.
Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  14:22, 1 July 2013 (UTC)
Why the difference in format for Player(s) of the Week vs Rookie(s) of the Week?  You have a Class col for Players but combine it for Rookies, it would be a little more consistent and less confusing if you did the same thing each category. The Rambling Man (talk) 16:38, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
Rookies are almost always freshmen. This is the first time I have heard of a rookie being a sophomore. It is almost as if an asterisk would be appropriate in this case rather than have a separate column.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  17:36, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
You know that, our novice readers don't.  The Rambling Man (talk) 20:14, 18 July 2013 (UTC)
Column added.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR)  22:47, 18 July 2013 (UTC)


### GA criteria
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
Many prose-related comments above.
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 

I'll put this "on hold" pending resolution of the comments. The Rambling Man (talk) 09:26, 1 July 2013 (UTC)