# Talk:1929 Atlantic hurricane season

This article needs a lot of work, these articles from 1900 to 1939 needs to have some sort of structure! Storm05 18:53, 1 February 2006 (UTC)

That's why it's a stub. Jdorje 19:29, 1 February 2006 (UTC)
I upped it to start due to every storm having their own section. Hurricanehink (talk) 23:18, 15 February 2007 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 02:49, 11 August 2014 (UTC)

"the storm struck Texas, bring strong winds to a large area." - grammar
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"known as the Bahamas hurricane," - is it?
Actually, it was technically more like a nickname :P --12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"offshore of Texas" - offshore is already a preposition
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
You should add that H1 dissipated over Arizona. That is very unusual! There is very little mentioned about the system remaining a TS over land so far. You should include some more observations. I believe HURDAT mentioned that El Paso or somewhere near there recorded TS winds, which was the basis for maintaining it so far inland.
Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:14, 12 August 2014 (UTC)
The damage from H1 in the lede doesn't match the section
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
" 60 to 80 mi (97 to 129 km) " - both pairs of units should be rounded
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"as well as a score or more injuries" - since "score" is a pretty archaic word, why not just "several" injuries?
"Four several and several years ago..."? :P --12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"and telegraph lines, suffered about $365,000 in damage." - drop that last comma
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"A trough developed near Cape Verde around September 11." - you sure it wasn't a tropical wave? And you don't say that this was the genesis for H2.
Hmm, it probably was a tropical wave, which is a trough--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"the system peaked with maximum sustained winds of 155 mph (250 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of 924 mbar (27.3 inHg)." - what was the basis for the estimate for the peak winds?
Nothing recorded that wind speed. It was adjusted upward significantly from 100 knots. I'm guess it was due to the pressure-wind relationship? "ship the Potomac recorded 924 mb ... suggests winds of 137 kt and 134 kt from the Brown et al. intensifying hurricane pressure-wind relationships ... Winds analyzed to be 135 kt at 18Z on the 25th, up from 100 kt originally." Should I mention the pressure-wind relationship?--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
You have three separate sentences describing boats being ruined or wrecked in the H2 section. Could you please combine?
I'm not sure how I can do that --12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"Further north" - any time you deal with direction or distance, use "Farther"
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"A devastating tornado was in Fort Lauderdale. The twister damaged a four story hotel, a railway office building, and several cottages." - make one sentence
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"Historical weather maps indicate that a low pressure area was embedded within a west to east oriented stationary front on September 24." - you should add a general location
Unfortunately, the only thing META shows is "northwest Atlantic Ocean." No coordinates are given, so I can't get anymore specific than that.--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"Early on September 25, a tropical depression formed just west of Bermuda. Later that day, the depression strengthened into a tropical storm." - there are several examples in this article, but this one works well. You have a habit of writing very short, choppy sentences, when one single sentence would work much better.
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"Four hours later, sustained winds peaked at 60 mph (95 km/h). " - was this based on the ship report?
A ship did measure winds of 60 mph, but not at that time.--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"The extratropical remnants accelerated northeastward and then east-northeastward, before dissipating east-southeast of Newfoundland. - when?
Exactly one month before Black Tuesday :P --12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"until dissipated well southeast of Newfounland on October 20" - grammar
Fixed that and the typo that you didn't notice :P --12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
" Strengthening further, the hurricane peaked with maximum sustained winds of 80 mph (130 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of 997 mbar (29.4 inHg). - again, on what basis was the peak winds?
IDK--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
All in all, pretty good! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  02:49, 11 August 2014 (UTC)