# Talk:Bob Heffron

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Reviewer: Grahamec (talk · contribs) 13:14, 24 November 2014 (UTC)
This is looking good, I once did some small work on this article, but that has little to do with the current state of the article.

A nit-pick: "he presented a proposal to the cabinet outlining the creation of a tenchological-based university in NSW, as a separate expansion from the existing Sydney Technical College". This does not read well. Perhaps it is intended to say something like "as well as".
I have now slightly rewritten this.
The last sentence:..."which included the building named after her father forty years previously." Has this been mentioned before, I can't see it, maybe it should read: "included a building". Actually I see it now.
I have changed the caps at the beginning of parenthetical clauses in a couple of places to reflect my understanding of best practice.
link in ref 42 to citation is broken, Uni Sydney's fault, but the award is confirmed at http://sydney.edu.au/senate/Hons_centenary.shtml
link in ref 46 is also broken, but it is referred to at http://www.cityofsydney.nsw.gov.au/vision/better-infrastructure/buildings-and-facilities/heffron-hall
Is it well-written? 
Is it verifiable with no original research? 
As noted above a couple of the refs are broken and will have to be fixed if you take it to FAC.
Is it broad in its coverage? 
Is it neutral? 
Is it stable? 
Is it illustrated? 
So I am passing it.--Grahame (talk) 11:24, 25 November 2014 (UTC)

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