# Talk:2010 Penang dragon boat tragedy

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This review is transcluded from Talk:2010 Penang dragon boat tragedy/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs) 21:35, 11 August 2020 (UTC)


### GA Review
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written.
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#### General
Should be comprising of policemen... not comprising policemen
 Done WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
Should be or get clearance
 Done WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
Minor, okay if not changed: Don't have to mention parents name, can just say a parent of a deceased victim
 Done WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
As well, I don't think inquired is the right word and can probably be cut out. There are also some more wording changes needed. Therefore, the sentence can read On 4 November 2010, a parent of a deceased victim revealed that the dragon boat training was unscheduled and conducted due to student requests to a new teacher already interested in joining the training session.
 Done Note that to be clear, it was revealed by the club to parent, not by parent. WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
Teacher and student don't need to be linked.
 Done WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
Outdoor activities doesn't need to be linked.
 Done WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)
Camping trip doesn't need to be linked.
 Done WPSamson (talk) 03:19, 14 August 2020 (UTC)