# Talk:Armenia at the 2018 Winter Olympics

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)

Hi Crzycheetah! I will review this article for you. I will complete a quick c/e of the article first. Feel free to revert any of the changes, as I will only make what I feel are non-controversial improvements. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)

Copyedit
Here is my copyedit. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:32, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
Another c/e. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
Prose & MOS
In the lead, "The team's best finish in any event was a 42nd place mark by " - would recommend changing "best" to "highest", as finishing 42 out of 200 racers would be better than finishing 40 out of 40.
In the first paragraph, "Armenia became an independent nation again following" - maybe explain what you mean by "again"?
Alpine skiing paragraph, "skis and was thinking of dropping out of competition." - change "was thinking of" to "was contemplating"
Alpine skiing paragraph, "new pair of skis to Pyeongchan just in time" - change "just in time." to "in time for his first event."
Alpine skiing paragraph, "On 22 February 2018, Karapetyan, placing 50th in the first race of Men's slalom and 41st in the second race, finished the event ranked 42nd." - kind of a confusing sentence structure. Maybe something like "On 22 February 2018, Karapetyan finished the Men's slalom ranked 42nd after placing 50th in the first race and 41st in the second race." « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
Images
No images used, except country flag, which is PD. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:28, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
References
References all look good. Reliable and cited in-line. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
Overall
Overall, everything looks pretty good. Let me know if you have any questions. Will place on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  15:46, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
Thank you for your review. I've made the aforementioned adjustments. Please take a look at the "Background" section again, is it fine or do I need to just remove the "again" word?--Cheetah (talk) 16:40, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
Makes more sense now. I made a quick c/e. Everything looks good here. Passed. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  16:44, 5 September 2018 (UTC)
Thanks!--Cheetah (talk) 16:58, 5 September 2018 (UTC)