# Talk:A Sick Day for Amos McGee

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Reviewer: Valereee (talk · contribs) 14:15, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

Thanks for picking up this review. I am on mobile so I won't be able to respond to any review in any substance for about a week. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 14:23, 14 April 2019 (UTC)

No worries, I'll start working! When you're back, be sure to ping me in case I miss it going by on my watch list.
@Valereee: I'm back. I've responded to the comments below. As for the cover illustration question above, looking at the MOS it doesn't feel like the Caldecott medal edition would be more definitive and so I think the default to first edition would apply. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 15:57, 22 April 2019 (UTC)


### Shaky assertions
In the lede: "It shares a simple message that portraying kindness and thoughtfulness to others, and all species, is very important in our society." I'm not finding anything that supports this statement in the sections?
Looks like I never rewrote the LEAD after revising the article. I have done so now. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
In "writing and illustrations": "Even when the reader does not explicitly notice those details they still help to serve the overall atmosophere and feel of the story." I'm not finding this explicitly stated in the sources. The Bird source says, "You notice them, but you don’t. That’s the charm." The PW source appears to say nearly the opposite: "draw subtle elements to viewers' attention"
Tweaked. Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
"All of this serves to give the book a kind of timeless quality, giving no real indication of the era in which it was created." This seems to be a nonsequitur from the previous sentence, and the Bird source says it's timeless, but doesn't say anything about what makes it feel that way? --valereee (talk) 14:29, 17 April 2019 (UTC)
So I've made it the first rather than last sentence. As for supporting what it says, I would suggest that the rest of the Bird article supports this assertion which is in its "LEAD". Best, Barkeep49 (talk)
Those look good! I'll do one final critical read-through early tomorrow. Nice article, actually made me buy the book in anticipation of having a gifting opportunity. :) --valereee (talk) 18:23, 23 April 2019 (UTC)
Valereee It would indeed make a very fine gift. Thanks for your work reviewing and let me know if you find anything else to be fixed/improved. Best, Barkeep49 (talk) 18:44, 23 April 2019 (UTC)
Passing for GA --valereee (talk) 10:53, 25 April 2019 (UTC)