# Talk:A Story About My Uncle

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Reviewer: Kingsif (talk · contribs) 01:41, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
Opening Kingsif (talk) 01:41, 2 February 2020 (UTC)


### Style
Lead fair length for article
The lead sentence The game was "re-developed professionally" after the collaboration with Coffee Stain Studios. either needs a citation for the quotation or, preferably, to rephrase. If it's not an actual quotation, remove the marks.
 Done

The "brilliant scientist" needs a citation - refs can come at the end of a block of sentences if it's just information being sourced, but all quotes must be directly supported by their source
 Done

Do "waste disposal system" and "waste disposal dimension" really warrant quotation marks?
 Done

The Gameplay section has a lot about the introduction to the world cutscene, which isn't really the gameplay.
 Done

In my ce of the section, I've added a 'who?' tag to an instance of "he" - it's not clear if this is the narrator or the uncle.
 Done

Needs some inline attribution for the "playing with gravity" quotation - i.e. write in the sentence who said that and why they're important in terms of the game's dev
 Done

The article have different things in AmEng and BritEng, could it be standardised to one or the other - I'd recommend BritEng for proximity and similarity to Sweden.
 Done

I'll add a note here to say that some of the corrections to quotations in the reception look small but the nature of the mistake suggests a major gap in the grasp of English of someone making such errors - cutting them off halfway, leaving out parts of a noun phrase so it's nonsense, misinterpreting a critic statement, leaving out the actual criticism in the quote...
 Done

Needs attention - I've done a ce, but there are questions and suggestions above for things


### Coverage
Maybe more on gameplay - what does the player have to do (blow up rocks?) and what is the game's aim (rescue the uncle?) - what are the controls, do they differ on different consoles, etc.
 Done

One source says it's a puzzle platformer, does this deserve inclusion?
this says the game is not a puzzle platformer. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 09:48, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
Needs attention


### Illustration
Copyright gameplay image of first person perspective may not be fair use: it doesn't add anything to the reader's understanding of first person perspective, a common element
 Removed

Reception box seems unnecessary with only one rated review
 Removed

Same with the accolades table, with only one nomination
 Removed

Infobox and cover image good
Needs attention


### Neutrality
Fine
Pass


### Stability
Clean history and talk
Pass


### Verifiability
Sources look good
In-line citations good except those needed at quotations, mentioned above
Pass


### Copyright
Some close paraphrasing outside of quotations from here/ here and here/ here; also, some things directly quoted from these sources can easily be said in your own words, and may read better if done so (look at the right column for the things in the article that have been flagged - small phrases and the game title are fine - and see how they can be rewritten)
 Done

Otherwise, check seems fine
Question of copyright gameplay image above
Needs attention
on hold Kingsif (talk) 02:37, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
Kingsif, done. ~~ CAPTAIN MEDUSAtalk 09:48, 2 February 2020 (UTC)
With one last copyedit, fair.  Kingsif (talk) 13:18, 2 February 2020 (UTC)