# Talk:Arina Tanemura

Does anyone know what volume of SDC this one-shot was included in? Raven23 (talk) 16:52, 17 January 2008 (UTC)

Responding to old comment, but it was in volume 11. lullabying (talk) 18:44, 22 July 2019 (UTC)

I re-arranged the Works section, so that they are all now in a table. I personally think it looks better this way and makes more sense than the random dashes system that was going on before. If the consensus is otherwise though, feel free to change it back. Kelakagandy (talk) 09:13, 14 December 2008 (UTC)

Added a table for one-shots also. They're not in any order, since I don't know dates on some of them. Though the later ones are mostly in order, I think. Kelakagandy (talk) 03:00, 15 December 2008 (UTC)
That table format is inappropriate and does not follow the appropriate MoS. I've redone it to the proper format. -- AnmaFinotera (talk · contribs) 06:44, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

Here are some links to some interviews with Tanemura. I'm not sure if they'd be useful, but I figured I'd put them out there in case they are.

Interview with Publisher's Weekly
Interview with Anime News Network --Kelakagandy (talk) 20:58, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
Interviews have been integrated. Thanks. lullabying (talk) 18:44, 22 July 2019 (UTC)

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@Gabriel Yuji: I found an image of the back of the original drama CD that lists Tanemura as the voice of Maora, but I'm not quite sure how to credit it: https://static.mercdn.net/item/detail/orig/photos/m65916786173_2.jpg?1563794757
All I could find was that this CD was a magazine gift with the December 2004 issue of Ribon and also had an audio drama with Cactus's Secret. As with most Japanese sources, anything before 2010 is difficult to find on the Internet due to Japanese news sites removing old articles or preferring print media. The issue is currently out of print and Ribon's website detailing the magazine gift failed to be archived properly. lullabying (talk) 22:45, 22 July 2019 (UTC)

The CD itself is a reference, Lullabying. You can use Template:Cite AV media notes. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 17:17, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
@Gabriel Yuji: Thanks! The source is added. I think the article is good on citations for now. We probably just need a free photo of her at this point. lullabying (talk) 17:40, 23 July 2019 (UTC)
Good to go "B", Lullabying. Gabriel Yuji (talk) 22:24, 23 July 2019 (UTC)

I found some more interviews, which I will be adding soon:

BookLive (about Idol Dreams)
Shinkan (about Neko to Watashi no Kinyōbi)
Natalie (about Idolish7)
Shueisha/Ribon (about Full Moon o Sagashite and other various manga she published in the magazine)
lullabying (talk) 08:04, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

Oricon book listing for Idolish7 (as a secondary source)
lullabying (talk) 18:52, 31 October 2019 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Vanamonde93 (talk · contribs) 03:37, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

I'll review this. Vanamonde (Talk) 03:37, 20 April 2020 (UTC)


### Checklist
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it well written?
A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct: 
All issues addressd
B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation: 

Is it verifiable with no original research?
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline: 
Sources seem to be appropriately formatted.
B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines: 
All concerns addressed
C. It contains no original research: 
AGF on Japanese sources
D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism: 
Earwig's tool is clear, spotchecks clear.
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic: 
It's a bit thin on biographical detail, but not to the point of failing it.
B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style): 
Conversely, not too pleased with entire list of works; but not
Is it neutral?
It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each: 
Issues with use of interviews addressed; no other substantive concerns
Is it stable?
It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute: 

Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: 
An image would be nice, but PD images are hard to come by for less well-known people
B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: 

Overall:
Pass or Fail: 
Passing shortly.


### Comments
The second sentence of "early life", as written, seems self-contradictory; if the television had anime, that was still surely a form of entertainment? 
The interview says that her main source of entertainment was through reading manga, and since she lived in Aichi, she wasn't able to watch a lot of anime since her area mostly showed re-runs. lullabying (talk) 06:33, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Then I would rephrase it in that way.
 Done lullabying (talk) 21:47, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
"magazines aimed at an older female demographic"; can we be more specific about what types of magazines these were?
See shojo manga and josei manga for differences. In the interview she states that she was reading comics about "adult" topics such as extramarital affairs from a young age. lullabying (talk) 06:33, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Yes, but at the moment, they could be sports magazines, for all the reader knows. You need to clarify that they are manga, at the very least.
"from that time"; which time? This is ambiguous.
I mean, "at the time when she started drawing." lullabying (talk) 06:33, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
"she had passed the first round of submissions" I'm uncertain as to what this means; I think you're saying she passed the first round of selection, but it's a bit unclear.
Maybe it's "of selection?" But it just means that she passed the first round in the contest. lullabying (talk) 06:33, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
"she began practicing by drawing four pages of yonkoma" I think you mean to say four pages a day, or something similar; otherwise this is confusing.
I meant to write that she started drawing yonkoma and then increased the number of pages as she continued. lullabying (talk) 06:33, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
That's still unclear. If I were to draw every day, the number of pages I draw would increase. Unless you're talking about daily practice, the second part of that sentence is redundant.
This is the original text from her interview: でも、「まずはつけペンに慣れなきゃ」「修行しなきゃ」と思って、長いストーリーではなく、4コマを投稿し始めたんですよ。そしたら賞をいただいて。4コマ部門は5ページくらいで投稿できるんですけど、最初に投稿した作品で結構な賞金をもらえちゃったんです。「5ページでこんなに賞金をもらうわけにはいかない」と思って、16ページ・32本くらいの4コマを投稿していました。そこでギャグを描くのが楽しくなりましたね。 I decided to remove the text as it does seem unclear. lullabying (talk) 21:32, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
"Despite being published in a separate edition" does "edition" have a specific meaning with respect to manga? Otherwise, I think "supplement" or "special issue" is the term you are looking for. 
Special issue seems to be the right term. lullabying (talk) 06:33, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Actually, it wasn't a special issue. Ribon Original is an alternate magazine of Ribon that is published on a less frequent basis. Ribon is the main magazine. lullabying (talk) 09:52, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Then please say that; "special edition" isn't conveying that point.
 Done lullabying (talk) 21:44, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
The first paragraph of "career" also sounds somewhat inconsistent; if "The Style of the Second Love" brought her early fame, why is it that the ION is referred to as her breakthrough work? If ION was a bigger breakthrough, then surely there ought to be more details substantiating that?
"The Style of the Second Love" was her debut work and she got positive feedback from it. But I.O.N was popular enough to become her first multi-chapter story. lullabying (talk) 06:36, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Do you have a source saying that? If so, please say that instead; I would omit the "breakthrough" label.
I actually do not have a source; a lot of the sources just call it a breakthrough. lullabying (talk) 19:59, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
I found a source saying that it was her first series, so I will include that. lullabying (talk) 23:38, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
"but she was forced to cut the series short"; do we know why? Otherwise, it's an odd thing to say.
I don't think it was disclosed. lullabying (talk) 06:34, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
I would omit that detail, then, or if you are keen on it, make it clear that she said that in an interview, and didn't give the reason. Vanamonde (Talk) 16:10, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
This report states that she cut it short because the main character, Kyoko, did not appeal to the magazine's target demographic according to official polls. lullabying (talk) 19:54, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
I included a better source about it. lullabying (talk) 21:44, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
What is it about "Full Moon o Sagashite" that allowed Tanemura to write lyrics? It is unclear at the moment.
Full Moon o Sagashite is a story about idol singers, and she started the series out of a desire to write lyrics for the songs her characters would sing. Tanemura is also known to be a huge idol singer fan, though I'm not sure how relevant that is to the article. lullabying (talk) 19:56, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
 Done This information has been included. lullabying (talk) 21:44, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
"intentionally gave the story a different tone compared to The Gentlemen's Alliance Cross" Unless you have information about how the tone was different, I'd omit this; it doesn't really tell the reader anything. 
 Done Clarified. lullabying (talk) 22:39, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
"In November 2011, Tanemura departed from Ribon" At no point has the article made it clear she worked for Ribon; if this is the default model for manga, it's still unclear to people unfamiliar with the industry. 
She had an exclusive contract with the Ribon magazine and thus was only allowed to produce artwork or series under that magazine and publisher. lullabying (talk) 19:54, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
An interview isn't good enough for the statement "and she drew according to trends she believes are fashionably popular at that time, resulting in her unique art style". Unless you can find a source saying that directly, I would paraphrase this to something like "she tries to reflect contemporary styles in her drawing", or something similar, but simple. 
 Done I rephrased that sentence and removed "unique art style" since that seems to be WP:FLOWERY and WP:PROMO. lullabying (talk) 21:19, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
The list of works is rather long; it's taking up more space than the prose section of the article. I would recommend either splitting this off into a "list of works" article, or just pruning this down to her best known works. The full list doesn't really belong here. This is the case for most prolific authors, just so you know; see, for instance, Ursula K. Le Guin, which I brought to FA some months ago.
I tried modeling on Akira Toriyama, which was a GA and lists all of his works. Aside from that, her published works are notable and do deserve a mention. lullabying (talk) 21:50, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
All her works are not notable, that's my point. A very small fraction of authors are notable enough that all their works meet WP:N. The list is notable, but it belongs as a standalone. This is particularly true because Tanemura is young, and her list will presumably grow. If you don't, someone else is likely to split the list off; if not, I would expect the article would fail criterion 3b fairly soon. I'm not going to fail it over this now, but please take this point seriously. Vanamonde (Talk) 16:54, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
The lead, at the moment, is too much of a list of her publications, and not really a summary of the article. I'd suggest trimming it a little, since the article is also short, and then adding a sentence or two about her style and characters. You could also replace some of the stuff about her publications with a sentence about other activities she has done. 
 Done I tried to remove info about less notable series and included one more source/feedback about the main themes of her work, which I had also integrated into the lead. lullabying (talk) 21:18, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
Substance-wise, the lead is a lot better now. I'm still a little concerned that its language is on the flowery side. Your reworking of the artistry section was great; could you take another look at the lead?
 Done lullabying (talk) 20:20, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
I'm a little concerned about the heavy use of interviews in the early part of the article. Interviews are essentially primary sources; they are okay for strictly non-contentious material; but for things like the school competition, they're a little questionable. At the very least, you need to make an effort to find better sources; if they are not available, the wording may have to be adjusted to make it clear that Tanemura is the only source for that information.
Just to clarify, the contest wasn't held by a school. It was held by a manga publisher. lullabying (talk) 22:26, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
I rephrased some statements in the early life section and made sure to clarify that these statements were made by her. As far as the contest goes, she did not disclose which publisher it was for. lullabying (talk) 23:19, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
In general, the article is a little thin on details besides when she published which title. It isn't low enough to fail it; but I'd be a lot happier if you could look through sources again to see if you've really included all the biographical information you can. Even basic things like where she lives, where she went to school, and whether she went to college, are currently missing. I will let you work on these comments, and return when you've finished with them; please ping me when you've done so.
Japanese people are kind of touchy about keeping their privacy so they usually won't reveal information about where they went to school and such. Even then, most Japanese manga artists use pseudonyms and do not disclose private information about themselves. lullabying (talk) 19:59, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
That's as may be; we just need to do our best to include all the information available in reliable sources. At the moment, I suspect you could find a little more; I might be wrong. Vanamonde (Talk) 21:09, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
She started working for Ribon when she was 18, so I don't believe she went to college, and there's never been any mention of it. Also, information about primary/secondary schools are usually kept private. lullabying (talk) 21:35, 20 April 2020 (UTC)
@Vanamonde93: I did a sweep of articles talking about her childhood again and, as expected, nowhere does she mention which schools she attends. lullabying (talk) 22:27, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
The last sentence of "artistry and themes" seems out of place to me. I'd omit it altogether; it really belongs in the article about that artist, as it's only tangentially about Tanemura. 
 Done lullabying (talk) 22:27, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
@Vanamonde93: I've tried rephrasing and fixing up some statements. Please feel free to give me feedback. lullabying (talk) 23:48, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

@Lullabying: Most issues seem to have been fixed and the article is close to GA status, I think, but there's a couple of replies and a couple of outstanding points for you to look at. Vanamonde (Talk) 19:06, 22 April 2020 (UTC)