# Talk:Al-Fa'iz bi-Nasr Allah

This review is transcluded from Talk:Al-Fa'iz bi-Nasr Allah/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 18:24, 11 February 2023 (UTC)
Will take this on. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 18:24, 11 February 2023 (UTC)


### Criteria
No DAB links Y
No dead links Y
No missing citations Y
Passes spot checks Y


### Discussion
### Prose Suggestions
Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.


#### Lede
Suffering from epileptic seizures, al-Fa'iz died at the age of eleven currently merely suggests he died of a seizure, suggest  Suffering from epileptic seizures, al-Fa'iz died of one at the age of eleven


#### Life
he was mutilated and killed by being beaten to death by the palace women suggest simplifying to he was mutilated and beaten to death by the palace women
@Cplakidas: That is all of my suggestions; a fascinating article. Passing now. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 23:47, 11 February 2023 (UTC)
Thanks for the review and the suggestions, Iazyges, they have been implemented. Constantine   ✍  07:57, 12 February 2023 (UTC)