# Talk:A Transfer

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:08, 13 March 2021 (UTC)
Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:08, 13 March 2021 (UTC)


### Infobox and lead
In the infobox, use "plainlist" instead of "<br/>" per the rules on the template. Done
Is the "|story=Gainax" parameter necessary?
A Transfer" → "A Transfer" Done
What does "7.1% rating" mean?
It means that 7.1% of Japan's televisions were tuned to Tokyo TV during the run. I took it for granted, given the percentage.


### Plot
The plot is 417 words, while it should be under 400 per WP:TVPLOT. Done
Remove the comma after "poorly for Nerv".
Removed.


### Production
What exactly is "a mount" within the context of the show?
Specified.


### Cultural references and themes
The caption on the image should describe its significance within the article.
Also improve the non-free use rationales of the images (see MOS:TVIMAGE for help).
Hope it helps.
"awkward communication. ... Evangelion" → "awkward communication [...] Evangelion"
Fixed.
"the sixties inspire" → "the 1960s inspired" Done
Wikipedia doesn't normally use phrases like "he said" so try rewording the sentence. Done
References should be included at the end of each quote, so recite certain sources. Done
"A transfer" → "A Transfer" Done


### Reception
Again, explain what "7.1% rating" means and/or refers to.
The second reference after "home video releases" is missing parts of its title. Done
"as it shows" → "as it showed" Done


### Notes and references
Change the "Notes" header to "References", add a subsection titled "Citations" and make the original "References" section into a "Bibliography" subsection (example). Done
Archive all archivable sources (either manually or with this tool). Done
Optional, but it helps readers if you link websites within the "|website=" parameter. Done

@Some Dude From North Carolina:Tried my best.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:49, 14 March 2021 (UTC)


### Progress