# Talk:Alvin Clark (schooner)

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:01, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Move those refs out of the lead and put them in the main part of the article where you've expanded upon everything you've said in the lead.
Infobox has "{{{DESIGNATED_OTHER1_ABBR}}}" which clearly needs addressing.
Infobox mentions "Square stern" but this isn't mentioned anywhere in the article.
"foot of Sixth Avenue. " is mentioned in the lead and infobox but not the article.
Ref 1 doesn't appear to provide any sourcing information, it's just a link to a search engine.
" in Menominee, Michigan at t" comma after Michigan.
"rigged as a brigantine with a square rigged" any chance of avoiding that repetition?
" in Trenton, Michigan[7] in" comma after Michigan.
"1847,[5][3]" ref order.
"the ship for shipping" repetitive.
"it was it sold in 1852.[8] The second owner of the ship was" before he sold it in 1852 to ... i.e. merge sentences and make it active (he sold) rather than passive (it was sold).
I'm not an expert and I note Great Lakes is mentioned in the lead but nowhere else, no lakes are name-checked and this assumes our readers are familiar with the geography.  And I'm not...
" to Oconto, Wisconsin to " comma after Wisconsin.
Consider linking technical terms like "hold", "hatch", "mate", "salvage rights", "slip" etc.
"Alvin Clark[11]," ref after comma.
" recovering artifacts[5] " move ref to end of sentence.
"drunk" perhaps "inebriated" for encyclopedic tone.
AVOID SHOUTING in ref titles.
"deemed beyond saving, and it was deemed" deemed x 2.
"p. 220-21" should be "pp. 220–21".
"Anchor - Wisconsin " should be en-dash, not hyphen.
That's all I have for now, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 11:28, 24 April 2020 (UTC)
All issues are fixed. Lettler (talk) 15:33, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Promoted. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 15:54, 24 April 2020 (UTC)