# Talk:1994 Bangladesh cyclone

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 04:27, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
Hello, Hurricanehink. I will be reviewing this article tonight--12george1 (talk) 04:27, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

The first thing that stood out to me is that in most cases, you have several references clustered together. Is there a reason for that?
With some of the news articles, sometimes I used a citation just for a small bit. Sometimes they appeared in multiple sentences. I thought it would look best having the references listed at the end of the paragraph/thought. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
"a powerful tropical cyclone in the Bay of Bengal that killed 285 people" - But the infobox says 350
Ack, that's what I get for writing the lead before finishing the article. Removed "285". ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
"including at least 126 fishermen from Thailand who were sailing in the region; hundreds of fishermen were lost and presumed killed." - These two clauses look like they are saying the same thing
True, merged clauses. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
I know I just asked you to potentially cut something from the lead, but I think the section overall is a bit on the short side. This wasn't the worst cyclone ever and a not terribly interesting meteorologically, but surely that opening could be expanded a bit
Added a bit more. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
"That day at 06:00  UTC," - Too much space there
We need some sort of Space Force! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
"The cyclone moved ashore near the Bangladesh/Myanmar border," - I seem to remember you telling me not to use slashes. Say Bangladesh–Myanmar border instead
I'm not 100% sure if that's official policy. I changed it, but I've seen the slash for borders. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  14:53, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
Cox's Bazar has only two 'a's, you put three in all four times that city is mentioned in the impact. Also, maybe wikilink it somewhere?
That's bizarre! Wikilinked. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
"and the gov[4][22][23][24][25][26]" - Please tell me more about what the government did!!! *adjusts tin foil hat*
Just helped replant trees. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
"M Alimullah Miya. Cyclone Disaster Mitigation in Banglades" - You left out an 'n' for the author's last name and forgot the 'h' on the end of Bangladesh
Good catch, damn. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)
"United Nations Department of Humanitarian Affairs (Report). May 1994" - Why not write out the exact date (May 6, 1994) rather than just the month and year?
Because it's for UN DHA Information Reports 1–4. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
"With BC-Bangladesh-Cyclone Despite Cyclone, Burmese Refugees Unwilling to" - Are you sure this title is correct?
Sadly yes. The title might've gotten cut off, but LN doesn't show the complete title. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
References 23 and 24 look like duplicates
Oops, thanks. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
That should be it--12george1 (talk) 04:27, 12 July 2019 (UTC)

I believe I addressed all of your concerns - if not, please let me know what else I can do. Thanks for your review. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  22:14, 12 July 2019 (UTC)
Well, I am now satisfied with the condition of the article now. I will now pass it. Happy birthday!--12george1 (talk) 04:03, 13 July 2019 (UTC)

Thanks GC! :) ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  14:33, 13 July 2019 (UTC)