# Talk:1934 Muroto typhoon

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 00:16, 15 March 2016 (UTC)

"This value was also the lowest land-based pressure reading in the world on record at the time; however, it was surpassed the following year." - since the average reader of this article is likely a hurricane geek, I think it's worth mentioning that the 1935 Labor Day hurricane surpassed this in Florida
"After clearing Japan, the now extratropical storm traveled west and weakened. " - I'm assuming you mean east?
"Regarded as the "second[-]greatest catastrophe of modern Japan" - I don't think you need the hyphen in brackets. It draws too much attention IMO, even if it's technically needed
" Total damage exceeded US$300 million." - probably worth specifying it's 1934 USD
"On September 13, 1934, a tropical cyclone developed over the western Federated States of Micronesia." - is it worth saying what the islands were called at that time? (Caroline Islands). In fact, that term is timeless, compared to FSM which implies the country that has only been around since the 80's. I'm probably reading too much into this
I hate to ask, since you have such good research for Osaka, but do you have any impacts for Muroto?! I'm not even sure if it was a city at the time, but if you get impacts for Kochi Prefecture, that would be close enough, since that is where Muroto is located.
"The Japanese military was deployed to Osaka before nightfall on September 21 and water was being trucked in." - this could use a bit stronger of an introduction for the aftermath section
Maybe link "Baron"? IDK, no worries
All in all a great article for such an old, historic storm. The only bit that might be tricky is Muroto impact, but there's an easy solution ("including Kochi Prefecture, where Muroto is located"). ♫ Hurricanehink (talk)  00:16, 15 March 2016 (UTC)

Managed to find some bits for Kōchi and Muroto buried in Japanese sources and added that. I think I've covered everything though. Thanks for the review! ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 01:04, 15 March 2016 (UTC)