# Talk:Alice Gray

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This likely isn't right for the article, but putting here because it seems like a nice story (I haven't read through all of it yet, though). Basically, someone wrote to Gray for help taking care of his tarantula. Not only did she graciously respond with help, but they became penpals. He published the correspondence here (archive). — Rhododendrites talk \\ 02:36, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

This review is transcluded from Talk:Alice Gray/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 13:00, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

Where is the E. in Alice E. Gray referenced?
 Done In the Courant, but doesn't say what E stands for. Added the ref inline.
Is "origamist" a real word?  Our category calls her an "origami artist".
You'd love the one I originally had: "origamian" (which does seem to be used in some places in addition to the magazine title). But I figured err on the side of our list: List of origamists.
"entomologist," is linked twice in the lead.
 Done
"June 7, 1914 to " comma after 1914.
 Done
"farmer mother" well the source says she was a farmer's daughter, so not necessarily.
Good point. Tried to find anything else about them, but couldn't. Didn't see a good way to word this without duplicating the source so broke into two little sentences. Eh.  Done though.
"biology and entomology" probably comma after this.
 Done
Is it Teachers College or Teacher's College?  Infobox and article disagree.
 Done the former.
" treasure... " ellipsis usage here requires a non-breaking space before the three periods.
 Done
Master of Science is usually singular.
 Done
Our article calls it "Friends of the Origami Center of America" i.e. of America.
 Done
What's AMNH?  Add this after the fully expanded version.
 Done
"with well-known " unnecessary.
 Done
"by artist Michael LaFosse" is this notable?
I'm not an origamian origamist, but it seems like LaFosse is fairly well known? If it were self-published, I wouldn't include it, but since it's appeared in two books published by Tuttle Publishing, I figure it's not all that different (from a RS/WEIGHT point of view) from if he had written a few lines about her and citing that. — Rhododendrites talk \\ 19:12, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
"president of the organization she helped to found, the Friends of the Origami Center of America," you already said she was the founder of this.
 Done
That's all I have for this brief article.  I'll put it on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 16:52, 17 April 2020 (UTC)

@The Rambling Man: thanks for taking the time. I think I've fixed and/or responded to all of the above. — Rhododendrites talk \\ 19:12, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Hey, I appreciate the quick turnaround on this.  The one thing I forgot to mention was that the lead seems a little brief.  I think it could easily be doubled in size.  Everything  else seems fine, but if you could beef up the intro, I'll take a look  ASAP.  The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 20:09, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
@The Rambling Man: Ok. Expanded it a bit. Thanks. — Rhododendrites talk \\ 21:17, 17 April 2020 (UTC)
Great work.  Happy with this so I'm promoting.  The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:47, 18 April 2020 (UTC)