# Talk:All Souls (The X-Files)

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 23:14, 2 August 2012 (UTC)

Infobox
The image doesn't meet WP:NFCC as of right now. It doesn't help the reader understand the topic; its just a girl with her hands up. Expand the rationale, or remove. Production information, etc.?
Changed to be the lion-headed part of a Seraphim, the making of which is talked about in-depth in the article.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:59, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"One of the Nephilim's souls is taken to Heaven." isn't correctly. Re-writing to: "One of Nephilim's souls is taken to Heaven." without the as it makes it incorrect
Your suggested change would make the sentence grammatically incorrect - "the Nephilim's" is right 129.11.77.197 (talk) 10:18, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Yeah, that's grammatically incorrect.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Link Heaven in the image
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Lede
", and was directed by Allen Coulter" is in the sentence, making it huge, re-write to "; it was directed by Allen Coulter" keep the semi-colon
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
In some episode articles, airing is first, some writers and directors are first. Please try to be consistent in articles.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Only Monster-of-the-Week should be linked without the quote marks linked
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
a stand-alone plot which is unconnected to the series' wider mythology, or overarching fictional history → a stand-alone plot which is unconnected to the mythology, or overarching fictional history, of The X-Files
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
""All Souls" received a Nielsen household rating of 8.5 and was watched by 13.44 million viewers" re-write to: ""All Souls" earned a Nielsen household rating of 8.5, being watched by 13.44 million viewers in its intital broadcast" as cleanup
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"mixed reviews from television critics" did they note/mention anything specifically?
Well, considering that it's mixed, there's not a lot critics agreed with.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Way too may "the", consider re-writing: "it", "this", etc.
Well, it is the most common word in the English language, so I feel this is unnecessarily nit-picking just a tad.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"Angel and Brown" already above. Last paragraph is where this is.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
""Christmas Carol"/"Emily"" replace "/" with "and" as real word
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
consider re-writing "episode". Eg: "installment", "entry", "it", etc.
See above....--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Plot
add comma after "wheelchair" in the first sentence
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"amiss, makes his way outside" needs an "and"/fixing
That's grammatically sound: "Dara's father makes his way outside." is a sentence; "Dara's father, Lance Kernof (Eric Keenleyside), makes his way outside." is also a sentence with a descriptor added; "Dara's father, Lance Kernof (Eric Keenleyside), realizing something is amiss, makes his way outside." is another sentence, with another descriptor, this time, of action.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
add "with" before "her arms raised upward"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"Suddenly, lightning flashes." is very short. Perhaps merge it.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"her eyes gone" are gone?
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"the case" maybe "that" as "the" is already used so many times
See above...--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Devil doesn't need to be in capitals.
We're talking about THE Devil (y'know, Lucifer), so his name should be capitalized.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
after "Landry)" there is an unneeded comma
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"contain" should have an "s" at the end
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"God" shouldn't be in capitals
Again, we're talking about THE God in Christianity, and that's how his name is supposed to capitalized (Thus, why I linked it to God in Christianity).--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"hoping" → "attemping"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"That night, a man enters Paula's room and she dies" is short. Please merge
Why? A small sentence doesn't make this poor writing.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"Scully examines Paula's body, her eyes burned out" something isn't right
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Who is Scully and Mulder? Explain who there are "FBI special agents" in "Plot"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"to be Father Gregory" should be "Gregory" as it is already above; WP:MOS
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Production
"All Souls" was written by John Shiban and Frank Spotnitz, and directed by Allen Coulter" Huh, what? They wrote the teleplay, right. Therefore, the story writers are missing now.
Clarified that the episode's script was written by the two, the idea was by the others.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
alongside → along with
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Link Christmas
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"/" should be "and"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
In "Filming", note that Vancouver is in British Columbia
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
they'd should be "they did"
It's part of a quote, so I can't change it.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Is there any image that could be used in "Filming"
Maybe... I'll have a look around.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Too many "the" in this, and the article itself
Again, see above. This really is not that big of a deal.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Reception
"Reception" should be renamed to "Broadcast and reception" to match with most other X-Files episode articles
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Only Fox should be linked, not "network"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
""All Souls" premiered on the Fox network in the United States on April 26, 1998. The episode later debuted in the United Kingdom on BBC One on February 24, 1999" re-write to: ""All Souls" originally aired on the Fox network on April 26, 1998, and was first broadcast in the United Kingdom on BBC One on February 24, 1999".
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Did it earn a Nielsen rating, or "household rating"? In the lead, it says household, here it says just Nielsen rating
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"tuned in to the episode" to "that episode"
Again, why? 'The' is the most used word in the English language, and there's no reason to remove it.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
'All Souls' should be double quotes here, in "Reception"
Are you referring to the Vitaris quote? Per MOS, it should be in single quotes, since it's inside a quote.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
References
Ref. 1, 3, 4, 5, 7, 12: I know this is for GA, but, you could still link the book sources in the footnotes to "Bibliography" link as in FA and A-Class articles. Would just make the  article better. Note that this is a suggestion.
This is an excessive amount of work, and I'll do that if I try to get this up to FA or A-Class. Not necessary for GA.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Ref. 1, 3, 4, 5, 7, 12: Add year for footnote book sources, as in "The Post-Modern Prometheus"
Again, this is an excessive amount of work, and I'll do that if I try to get this up to FA or A-Class. Not necessary for GA.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Ref. 2: "Fox Broadcasting Corporation" should be linked to "Fox Broadcasting Company" instead
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Shouldn't the names be "last name" then "first name" for Ref. 2, 6
I don't know. Every other page that has this has been fine with leaving them, even "Triangle".
Ref. 6: Unlink  The X-Files: The Complete Fifth Season as it has been linked on a previous footnote
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Ref. 8: Double quotes ("All Souls") should be single quotes ('All Souls') per WP:MOS.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Why are British date formats being used for an American television series?
As long as I'm consistent, there's no issues. I like the way British dates looks.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Ref. 10: Is there a publisher? Don't think there is, but just making sure.
No, there isn't.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Per MOS:ACCESS, "Footnotes" and "Bibliography" should be real headings (sub-headings that is).
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
In "Bibliography", "US" should be "U.S."; that is real
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
External links
"TheXFiles.com" should be "XFiles.com". That's the website for this one.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"The X-Files Wiki, an external wiki" is repetitive. How about: "The X-Files, an external wiki". Plus, that matches with your FA, "Triangle". Yeah :)
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Actually, I went back and changed this. The site is called "The X-Files Wiki", not "The X-Files" (that's the show). The title and line might be repetitive, but we can't change a name just because it sounds better.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  23:14, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"TXF Season 5" should be "The X-Files" to match it with FA, "Triangle" getting it closer to there.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
"on" → "at" for "TheXFiles.com"
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Categories should be in alphabetical order.
Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
That is it. Good work, its a good read. On hold for now. TBrandley 04:47, 6 August 2012 (UTC)

I'll fix the picture soon.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  15:53, 6 August 2012 (UTC)
Everything has been addressed or commented upon. Thanks for the review.--Gen. Quon (Talk)  16:02, 6 August 2012 (UTC)