# Talk:Bosnia and Herzegovina at the 2014 Winter Paralympics

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 20:54, 28 August 2018 (UTC)

Hi Courcelles! This is my first GA review, so please bear with me. I will complete a quick c/e of the article first. Feel free to revert any of the changes, as I will only make what I feel are non-controversial improvements. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  20:54, 28 August 2018 (UTC)

Copyedit
Here is the link to my c/e. Nothing major. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:04, 28 August 2018 (UTC)
More c/e. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:16, 28 August 2018 (UTC)
Prose
"Bosnia and Herzegovina first participated in Paralympic competition at the 1996 Summer Paralympics, and their first Winter Paralympics appearance was four years prior, at the 2010 Winter Paralympics." - Do you mean 14 years later? 1996 to 2010?
I was thinking "four years prior to these Games I'm talking about", but that doesn't work, does it!
I would recommend removing ", making Sochi their second Winter Paralympic appearance" since you mention Sochi in the next sentence and the fact that it was their second is inferred. Or reword, it's just weird having Sochi used in this sentence before you state that the 2014 Paralympics was in Sochi in the next sentence.
Good idea, done. Courcelles (talk) 15:07, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
"The delegation sent to Sochi consisted of two alpine skiers" add "Bosnia and Herzegovina" before delegation.
Done. Courcelles (talk) 15:07, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
You link Ilma Kazazic and Senad Turkovic in the lead and the last section, but not in the background section. Per MOS:OVERLINK, I would link once in the lead, once in the background section, and once in the table.
I'm actually unsure we should be linking them at all, come to think of it, they aren't notable per WP:NOLY.  Thoughts?
{{infobox country at games}} has a field for flagbearer. Is there a reason you aren't filling it out?
Cerebral palsy is linked twice in the body of the article. Recommend removing the second link.
Done. Courcelles (talk) 15:07, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
Please use &ndash; for all dates (i.e. 7–16).
Hmm?  Both date ranges are using an endash now?
Recommend using the {{Abbr}} template for "diff", "DNF" and "DNS" in the table.
You state "Did Not Finish" (DNF) in the text, but not "Did Not Start" (DNS). This could be resolved by using the {{Abbr}} template.
Thanks,  « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:20, 28 August 2018 (UTC)

Images
No images used, except country flag, which is PD. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:43, 28 August 2018 (UTC)
References
All references are reliable, correctly formatted, and placed in-line, except those items noted below:
Why have you archived references 14 and 16? They are to videos, which I don't think get archived (just the page housing the video is archived)? The archive link to 16 doesn't work for me either.
Again, that's how the tool works, removed for those specific refs. Courcelles (talk) 15:07, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
You archived a few urls that are still live. Is there any reason for that (you expect them to go dead soon)?
I just use the archival tool on the toolserver, whose behaviour is a bit odd. Courcelles (talk) 15:07, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
Ref 6 should include the author, Andrew McGarry via the |last= and |first= fields
Added. Courcelles (talk) 15:07, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
Overall
Looks good! Just a few minor items noted above. Will put on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  21:43, 28 August 2018 (UTC)
Partial replies, have to leave the computer for a bit. Courcelles (talk) 15:07, 30 August 2018 (UTC)
Think I've got everything here, Gonzo_fan2007, Thanks. Courcelles (talk) 00:42, 2 September 2018 (UTC)
Nice job Courcelles. This passes now. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @  02:46, 2 September 2018 (UTC)