# Talk:Addiction to power in The Lord of the Rings

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Reviewer: Artem.G (talk · contribs) 07:28, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Hi, will take this one! It can take me several days to review. Artem.G (talk) 07:28, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks as always. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:21, 6 January 2022 (UTC)
Comments:

"progressively corrupts the mind of its owner to use the Ring for evil." - shouldn't a plural be used here? There were multiple owners, so maybe "the minds of its owners"?
I guess the point is, there can never be more than one at once, and that person is invariably progressively corrupted.
agree, you're probably right
"1887 statement that "power tends to corrupt, and absolute power corrupts absolutely".[1]" - I think that the ref can be removed from here, you have the same quote with ref in the body
All right, but there are plenty of "{{cn}}" inserters out there.
if you think this would happen, let the ref stay.
"Sauron was already corrupted when he chose to put much" - maybe not "corrupted", but "addicted"?
No, he was already corrupted before he created the addictive Ring.
"In J. R. R. Tolkien's fantasy work The Lord of the Rings" - maybe something like "in Tolkien's fantasy world of Middle-earth, the One Ring..."? The Ring was present in The Hobbit too.
I think we might leave this one, the ring (small 'r') in The Hobbit has no such dark origins, and Tolkien had to chase about quite a bit to modify the children's book to make it even roughly compatible with the later story of the One Ring.
ok, fair point.
I don't have any strong objections here, but for those readers who are not very familiar with LotR, "during the Second Age" and "own power as a Maia" would be cryptic. Though both are links, so it's probably fine.
Glossed both.
" as Elrond, Galadriel, Aragorn and Faramir " - link Aragorn here. and maybe a serial comma will be suitable.
Done.
"however, as can be seen in the changes it works in Frodo, Bilbo and Gollum." - what can be seen in the changes? not sure I understand this sentence clearly.
Edited.
"murderously obsessed" - do we really need 'murderously' here?
Removed.
Tolkien vs Plato: Further information: One Ring - should it be Ring of Gyges here? if not, I think that a link to One Ring is not needed here, as it was discussed above.
Fixed.
"Shippey quotes Lord Acton's 1887 statement:" - for readers who are not from England, some introduction of Lord Acton is needed.
Glossed.
More to come. Artem.G (talk) 17:00, 8 January 2022 (UTC)
Few more:

""man deþ swa he byþ þonne he mot swa he wile": "A man does as he is when he can do what he wants"" - is it from any book, or is it a proverb or something similar?
Yes, it's a proverb.
"They sound oppressive, like Nazi slogans " - maybe Nazi propaganda or something similar could be linked here?
Done.
That's all from me. Very nice and really interesting article, thanks for that! Sources are fine, no copyvio, both images are tagged. Artem.G (talk) 11:11, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:06, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
Passing now, really nice article! Artem.G (talk) 12:19, 9 January 2022 (UTC)