# Talk:2009 World Cup of Pool

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 08:12, 22 April 2020 (UTC)
Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 08:12, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose):  b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): 
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section):  b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR): 

It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects):  b (focused): 

It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias: 

It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.: 

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):  b (appropriate use with suitable captions): 

Overall:
Pass/Fail: 


### Infobox
The tournament name should be mentioned in the name= field of the infobox
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:33, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


### Lead
"was a professional pool tournament played in the discipline of nine-ball. The event was the fourth World Cup of Pool, a scotch doubles knockout championship representing 32 national teams." - how about merging these two sentences together and making them more concise?
It's actually already quite a long sentence. My only suggestion would be to change it to:
The 2009 World Cup of Pool (also known as the 2009 PartyPoker World Cup of Pool due to sponsorship) was a professional nine-ball pool, and the fourth World Cup of Pool, a scotch doubles knockout championship representing 32 national teams.
I'd say that it's an improvement MWright96 (talk) 15:14, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
But, I find that to be quite long. I do prefer to state we are talking about pool, and then that it's nine-ball, as they aren't the same thing. Let me know your thoughts Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC).
"The Korean team of Ga Young Kim and Yun Mi Lim were the first all-female team" - repetition of the word "team"
Changed to pair. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
Delink the dollar sign
Yeah, I didn't know this was a thing. I get confused as to why we do this, considering the symbol is used for many different currencies, yet the £ which we should link isn't used for very much. Unlinked. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"The USA team were defeated in the quarter-finals by the Chinese pair Fu Jian-bo and Li He-wen 5–9." - Chinese pair of
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"The event was won by the Filipino team of Francisco Bustamante and Efren Reyes, who defeated the German team" - repetition of the word "team"
reworded. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:37, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


### Tournament format
"The 2009 World Cup of Pool was a pairs nine-ball tournament played at the the Annex of SM City North EDSA in Quezon City," - stray "the" is unneeded
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"in the final of the previous year's event." - how about 2008 event.
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"The tournament was broadcast as 31 one-hour episodes also produced by Matchroom.[8] Locally, the event was broadcast live on Solar Sports and CS9.[9]" - how about The tournament was broadcast live locally on Solar Sports and CS9, and 31 one-hour episode were produced by Matchroom Sport.[8][9]
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


### Prize fund
"This was similar to that of the previous year's event." - the text in bold is overlinked
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"Money earned was shared between the players." - Money earned by the team was shared between their players.
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


### Teams
"with 31 countries participating, two teams representing the host nation Philippines." - and two teams
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:07, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"An all female team," - all-female
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:07, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


### Early rounds
"The opening match of the tournament featured" - saw
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"featured the French team of Stephan Cohen and Vincent Facquet win 8–1 over the Canadian team." - French pair of Stephan Cohen and Vincent Facquet take a 8–1 victory over the Canadian team.
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"allowed USA to win 8–7." - allowed the USA
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"The defending champion USA team of Rodney Morris and Shane Van Boening met the Maltese team of Alex Borg and Tony Drago in the opening match." - more repetition of the word "team"
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"The unseeded Indonesian team won their opening round match over the Indian team" - repetition of the word "team"
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"An all-female team competed for the first time at the event, with the Korean team of Ga Young Kim and Yun Mi Lim." - repetition of the word "team"
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"The pair lead 3–0 before being defeated 5–8" - led
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"who won six racks in-a-row.[19][15]" - refs in numerical order please
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"Japan were trailing at 3–6 behind in their match against Croatia," - remove the word in bold
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"The team defeated the Hong Kong team" - more close repetition of the word "team"
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"The finish team won 8–3 over" - typo; should be Finnish
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
Also, for the above sentence, it would be benefical to mention the Finnish players by name
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"Kenny Kwok and Lee Chenman in a whitewash 8–0." - the words in bold should be the other way round
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"when referee Cielo Lopez deemed Bruno Muratore's arm had struck the cue ball." - how about expand that it was Muratore's left arm that was deemed to have struck the cue ball
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"The Philippine A side of Orcollo and Alcano won eight straight racks after trailing 0–3 to the Russian side to win 8–3." - repetition of the word "side"
 Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)
"but missed some "crucial shots" during the match." - according to whom?
Hmm, the only info I have is that Matchroom Sport published the report. I'll see if I can dig up an author of the original piece Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 10:09, 29 April 2020 (UTC)


### Later rounds (quarter-final—final)
"The quarter-finals were all played on 5 September and as a race-to-nine racks." - the word in bold is unneeded
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"defeating the Netherlands team Niels Feijen and Nick van den Berg 9–7." - duo of
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"the Chinese and Filipino teams were at hill-hill 8—8." - the em dash should be replaced by an en dash (–) per MOS:DASH
My AWB sweep beat me to this one. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
"The Philipino team won the next rack to win the tournament winning 11–9." - win the match 11–9 and the tournament.
done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 14:12, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


### Images
The image of Reyes should be made upright per MOS:UPRIGHT
Made 0.6 - I'm never sure on correct sizes for these. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:58, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


### References
Those references that are missing the dates of publication should be included
The archive link for Reference 2 needs fixing
Ive just removed it. Wayback machine and webmedic are not accessible for my browser currently, so I'll have to look into that later. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
References 7 and 10 are the same
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
Reference 19's publisher should be the work instead
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
References 31, 32, 35 and 36 are missing their respective works
Done Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 13:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
Am going to put the article on hold to allow the nominator to address/query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 09:53, 22 April 2020 (UTC)

@Lee Vilenski: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 10:58, 1 May 2020 (UTC)

"Russia's Ruslan Chinachov was only 17-years-old; but missed some "crucial shots" during the match"
Missing crucial shots is expected of a minor. Unless he insisted on playing shots under pressure, which he couldn't have because shots are played interchangeably, it should say "...17 years old, and missed..."
Also, why is 17-years-old hyphenated if it's not preceded by an article?
Splićanin (talk) 17:39, 17 May 2020 (UTC)

Sure, easy enough to change to "and". The reason it doesn't currently say that is because as an encylopedia, we shouldn't make assumptions on people's abilities, and can only go on what the sources say. I'm not sure I understand the second point. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski (talk • contribs) 17:55, 17 May 2020 (UTC)