# Talk:Bonin white-eye

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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 21:19, 19 March 2019 (UTC)

I'm currently travelling, I have time to read but have to see when I have time to upload the comments, so I might take a few days longer. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 21:19, 19 March 2019 (UTC)

Since 1995 it is known to be a white-eye in the family Zosteropidae, and is closely related to the golden white-eye of the Marianas Islands. – remove "and is" or replace with "that is" to make sentence parts fit?
Done
suggest to use the correct dashes (the long ones) for ranges (e.g., 3–4 mm) and separating sentences.
Done
It is not stated in the main text since when it was considered a member of the white eyes. This info is in the lead though.
Added
nominate – please link
Done
There are two subspecies of Bonin white-eye, the nominate, formerly found in Mukojimaand Chichijima – that means the nomimate form is extinct? Would specify for clarity.
Done
The nominate race has – use past tense if extinct
Done
the think black line – "a" "thin" black line?
Is it the only member of its genus? I would explicitly state this.
The species as once found – "was"?
Fixed
and a bird from that island were the type specimen – why past, is the type specimen lost?
should have been was, changed
and a bird from that island were the type specimen for the species. – this means a bird from the population before its extinction? Would state for clarity
Clarified on preceding sentence where that fact sits more naturally
Communication – suggest to name it "Vocalisations", as "communication" would encompass much more (visual, etc) which is not mentioned.
I think its fine but changed
image caption: Calophyllum inophyllum, on Haha-jima, are part of the diet of the Bonin white-eye – but which parts? Fruits of? Seeds of? And wouldn't it be better to show a native plant species anyways?
Changed caption. If I ever find an image of a native plant it feeds on will add it. Sabine's Sunbird  talk 19:13, 24 March 2019 (UTC)
with vines, grasses, pine needles, rootlets, woven in, – maybe "and rootlets woven in"?
Done
19.5–20.5 mm (0.77–0.81 in)x15–15.8 mm (0.59–0.62 in) – I don't think this works with the templates so well. Maybe write like this: "19.5–20.5 mm x 15–15.8 mm (0.77–0.81 in x 0.59–0.62 in)"
done
in the lead: two eggs. I would add "usually", otherwise it sounds as if it is fixed to this count.
fixed
Warbling white-eyes may have had some effect on the behaviour of Bonin white-eye, – "Bonin white-eyes" (plural)?
fixed
The Bonin Islands (Hahajima pictured) have been protected to protect the species – I'm a bit confused; it occurs only on one of the islands? --Jens Lallensack (talk) 16:23, 24 March 2019 (UTC)
It was a big reason for the protection. Clarified.
Cool, all doneSabine's Sunbird  talk 22:36, 24 March 2019 (UTC)