# Talk:Bahram I

There is a good amount of scholarship out there to suggest Shaphur had actually engineered Manicheanism to infect the Roman legions with a pacifist religion.  How good are the sources for the actual existence of Mani?Canlawtictoc (talk) 08:39, 17 July 2019 (UTC)

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Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 20:36, 1 September 2019 (UTC)

Give me a couple of days. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:36, 1 September 2019 (UTC)
I have done a little copy editing which you will want to check.

File:Shahname - Mani death.jpg needs a US PD tag.
You are inconsistent in giving publisher locations.
"Bahram I was the oldest son of Shapur I." Perhaps continue the sentence to give a brief explanation of who Shapur I was?
"named Hormizd I, Narseh, and Shapur Meshanshah" Hormizd wasn't named "Hormizd I".
"a way to increase and spread their vast influence" "vast" is a 'word to watch'. Suggest deleting. Or changing.
"in the same fashion as Jesus' entry into Jerusalem" This may be accurate and it may be cited, but IMO it would be better to just describe it rather than make comparisons. (Which many readers may not understand/relate to.)
"Bahram I was forced to imprison Mani" "forced"? He was the shah. Possibly a different word? ('persuaded'?)
"Under Bahram I, reverse coins were changed back to the version minted during the reign of Shapur I, with two attendants turnign their backs to the fire altar" Several things:
Do you mean 'the reverse of coins ... '?
What were they changed from?
What is the significence of "with two attendants turnign their backs to the fire altar"?
"The reverse mints imitates Bahram I" I don't understand this. What is a "reverse mint"? If they are coins of Bahram I's how can they be imitating him? (Do you mean 'show'?)
"The lost Book of the Portraits of Sasanian Kings imitated Bahram I as" "imitated"? Do you mean 'described'?
"Bahram I was keen on combat, hunting, and feasting, which he regarded as righteousness" Optional: It would be nice if we could be told how we know this.
Gog the Mild (talk) 11:02, 6 September 2019 (UTC)

@Gog the Mild: The significance about the two attendants bit doesn't seem to be emphasized in the source. About the Jesus bit: The source doesn't really describe it, it just compares it to Jesus' entrance. Also, I'm not really sure what to do with the publisher locations. --HistoryofIran (talk) 15:22, 7 September 2019 (UTC)

I like the changes. Don't worry about the attendants then. I am not personally happy with the Christ analogy, but you follow the source and it is "your" article, so fine.

Either all non-encyclopedia works should give the publisher locations, or none. You could solve it by removing the publisher locations from Yarshater and Rawlinson.
"The reverse mints shows Bahram I" Do you mean 'The reverse of this coin shows Bahram I ... '
Gog the Mild (talk) 19:39, 7 September 2019 (UTC)

I guess should have been a bit more thorough when editing this article - lots of minor issues. Anyways, I've removed the publisher locations now, and corrected the coin mint part. --HistoryofIran (talk) 19:49, 7 September 2019 (UTC)
Ah, we all find it hard to check our own work. No need to be hard on yourself. Nice work - again. Promoting. Gog the Mild (talk) 21:17, 7 September 2019 (UTC)