# Talk:2016 Paris ePrix

This review is transcluded from Talk:2016 Paris ePrix/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: Kpgjhpjm (talk · contribs) 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
Let us start this GA review . Kpgjhpjm 16:23, 4 August 2018 (UTC)


### Lead
Please change in the Les Invalides building complex before a crowd of 20,000 . to  in the Les Invalides building complex . A total of 20,000 people attended the race . Kpgjhpjm 16:31, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
Please change but lost his advantage to DiGrassi on the run to the first corner .  to but was passed by DiGrassi on the run to the first corner. Kpgjhpjm 16:36, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
Please change but retained his hold on third position . to but managed to retain the third position in the Championship . Kpgjhpjm 16:46, 4 August 2018 (UTC)
@MWright96: It's late night in my time zone , I will review the rest of the article tomorrow . Kpgjhpjm 17:09, 4 August 2018 (UTC)


### Background and preparation
#### 1st paragraph
Please change Coming into the race from Long Beach 3 weeks earlier. to After winning the previous round at Long Beach 3 weeks earlier ,  Kpgjhpjm 03:07, 5 August 2018 (UTC)
Please change and Jerome D Ambrosio for Dragon had seven points less in the battle for the position. to , seven ahead of Jerome D Ambrosio of Dragon in the battle for third position  . Kpgjhpjm 05:35, 5 August 2018 (UTC)


#### Second Paragraph
No issues


#### Third Paragraph
No issues


#### Fourth Paragraph
No real issues , but I will be making a few tweaks .


### Practice and Qualifying
#### First Paragraph
In the first sentence remove the second occurrence of the word Sunday .
The team names in the parenthesis is not needed . Kpgjhpjm 15:40, 5 August 2018 (UTC)


#### Second Paragraph
No issues


#### Third Paragraph
No issues


#### Fourth Paragraph
Mostry OK , I have made a tweak though . Kpgjhpjm 15:40, 5 August 2018 (UTC)


#### Fifth Paragraph
@MWright96: : Can you say what is meant by lost time in the first second . I think it might be lost time in the first sector.  Kpgjhpjm 15:48, 5 August 2018 (UTC)


### Race
This is the section with problems in many Motorsports articles .


#### First Paragraph
When the race started . Remove the word when and capitalise T in the .


#### Second Paragraph
Remove the word Nevertheless
A tweaks will be made by me here .


#### Third Paragraph
In the previous paragraph , it is stated that Buemi and Turvey were battling for fifth place , so when Buemi passed Turvey,  he moved into fifth . So when he passed Sarrazin , that move should be for fourth .
Please fix this - if di Grassi was leading , Vergne second , Bird third , and as per above sentence Buemi fourth , then where did Prost come from .


#### Fourth Paragraph
Change due to the tight track to due to the tightness of the track .
Change used FanBoost to used his FanBoost - he can' use the FanBoost of others .


#### Fifth Paragraph
No issues


#### Post-Race
No issues


### Classification
Question : Why are names of some drivers in bold ?


### Comments
On-hold for now , @MWright96: On these issues are fixed , I will take a final look and then promote the article. The issues in the Race section's third paragraph are very important ,So please take some time to fix them . When you are done , please ping me . Kpgjhpjm 12:54, 6 August 2018 (UTC)
@MWright96: Looks like all issues are fixed . Taking a final look . Kpgjhpjm 13:34, 6 August 2018 (UTC)
@MWright96: It's see no more issues , passing . Kpgjhpjm 13:42, 6 August 2018 (UTC)