Original text:
Outsourcing the DNS Authoritative service from the HNA to a third party raises a few privacy related concerns. <del> The Public Homenet Zone contains a full description of the services hosted in the network.  These services may not be expected to be publicly shared although their names remain accessible through the Internet.  Even though DNS makes information public, the DNS does not expect to make the complete list of services public.  In fact, making information public still requires the key (or FQDN) of each service to be known by the resolver in order to retrieve information about the services.  More specifically, making mywebsite.example.com public in the DNS, is not sufficient to make resolvers aware of the existence web site.  However, an attacker may walk the reverse DNS zone, or use other reconnaissance techniques to learn this information as described in RFC7707. In order to prevent the complete Public Homenet Zone being published on the Internet, AXFR queries SHOULD be blocked on the Public Authoritative Server(s).  Similarly, to avoid zone-walking NSEC3 RFC5155 SHOULD be preferred over NSEC RFC4034.  When the Public Homenet Zone is outsourced, the end user should be aware that it provides a complete description of the services available on the home network.  More specifically, names usually provides a clear indication of the service and possibly even the device type, and as the Public Homenet Zone contains the IP addresses associated with the service, they also limit the scope of the scan space. In addition to the Public Homenet Zone, the third party can also monitor the traffic associated with the Public Homenet Zone.  This traffic may provide an indication of the services an end user </del>  accesses, plus how and when they use these services.  Although, caching may obfuscate this information inside the home network, it is likely that outside your home network this information will not be

Reviewer comments:
Section 12 needs to be fleshed out.
OOps, I rewrote Privacy Considerations since that was section 12.

Revised text:
Outsourcing the DNS Authoritative service from the HNA to a third party raises a few privacy related concerns.  <ins> The Public Homenet Zone lists the names of services hosted in the home network.  Combined with blocking of AXFR queries, the use of NSEC3 RFC5155 (vs NSEC RFC4034) prevents an attacker from being able to walk the zone, to discover all the names.  However, the attacker may be able to walk the reverse DNS zone, or use other reconnaissance techniques to learn this information as described in RFC7707. In general a home owner is expected only to publish names for which there is some need to be able to reference externally.  Publication of the name does not imply that the service is necessarily reachable from any or all parts of the Internet.  RFC7084 mandates that the outgoing-only policy RFC6092 be available, and in many cases it is configured by default.  A well designed User Interface would combine a policy for making a service public by a name with a policy on who may access it. In many cases, the home owner wishes to publish names for services that only they will be able to access.  The access control may consist of an IP source address range, or access may be restricted via some VPN functionality.  The purpose of publishing the name is so that the service may be access by the same name both within the home, and outside the home.  Sending traffic to the relevant IPv6 address causes the relevant VPN policy to be enacted upon. While the problem of getting access to internal names has been solved in Enterprise configurations with a split-DNS, and such a thing could be done in the home, many recent improvements to VPN user interfaces make it more likely that an individual might have multiple connections configured.  For instance, an adult child checking on the state of a home automation system for a parent. In addition to the Public Homenet Zone, pervasive DNS monitoring can also monitor the traffic associated with the Public Homenet Zone. This traffic may provide an indication of the services an end user </ins> accesses, plus how and when they use these services.  Although, caching may obfuscate this information inside the home network, it is likely that outside your home network this information will not be