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1. <del> The HTTP freshness lifetime RFC7234 caching attribute specifies that a client may safely reuse a response to satisfy future requests over a specific period of time.  It does not specify that the resource will be not be modified during that period. </del>  For instance, a front page newspaper photo with a freshness lifetime <del> of one hour would mean that no user should see a photo more than one hour old.  However, the photo could be updated at any time resulting in different users seeing different photos depending on the contents of their caches for up to one hour.  This is compliant with the caching mechanism defined in RFC7234. Users that need to confirm there have been no updates to their current cached resources typically invoke the reload (or refresh) mechanism in the user agent.  This in turn generates a conditional request RFC7232 and either a new representation or, if unmodified, a 304 response RFC7231 is returned.  A user agent that manages HTML and its dependent sub-resources may issue hundreds of conditional requests to refresh all portions of a common HTML page REQPERPAGE. Through the use of the versioned URL design pattern some content providers never create more than one variant of a sub-resource.  When these resources need an update they are simply published under a new URL, typically embedding a variant identifier in the path, and references to the sub-resource are updated with the new path information. For example, https://www.example.com/101016/main.css might be updated and republished as https://www.example.com/102026/main.css and the html that references it is changed at the same time.  This design pattern allows a very large freshness lifetime to be applied to the sub-resource without guessing when it will be updated in the future. Unfortunately, the user-agent is not aware of the versioned URL design pattern.  User driven refresh events still translate into wasted conditional requests for each sub-resource as each will return 304 responses. The immutable HTTP response Cache-Control extension allows servers to identify resources that will not be updated during their freshness lifetime.  This effectively instructs the client that any conditional request for a previously served variant of that resource may be safely skipped without worrying that it has been updated. </del>  2. <del> When present in an HTTP response, the immutable Cache-Control </del>  extension indicates that the origin server will not update the representation of that resource during the freshness lifetime of the response.

Reviewer comments:
Editorial stuff, mostly line wrapping and adjusting terminology. Happy to chat through it if you like.
thanks for this

Revised text:
1.  <ins> HTTP's freshness lifetime mechanism RFC7234 allows a client to safely reuse a stored response to satisfy future requests for a specified period of time.  However, it is still possible that the resource will be modified during that period. </ins> For instance, a front page newspaper photo with a freshness lifetime  <ins> of one hour would mean that no user would see a cached photo more than one hour old.  However, the photo could be updated at any time resulting in different users seeing different photos depending on the contents of their caches for up to one hour.  This is compliant with the caching mechanism defined in RFC7234. Users that need to confirm there have been no updates to their cached responses typically use the reload (or refresh) mechanism in their user agents.  This in turn generates a conditional request RFC7232 and either a new representation or, if unmodified, a 304 (Not Modified) response RFC7232 is returned.  A user agent that understands HTML and fetches its dependent sub-resources might issue hundreds of conditional requests to refresh all portions of a common page REQPERPAGE. However some content providers never create more than one variant of a sub-resource, because they use "versioned" URLs.  When these resources need an update they are simply published under a new URL, typically embedding an identifier unique to that version of the resource in the path, and references to the sub-resource are updated with the new path information. For example, "https://www.example.com/101016/main.css" might be updated and republished as "https://www.example.com/102026/main.css", with any links that references it being changed at the same time. This design pattern allows a very large freshness lifetime to be used for the sub-resource without guessing when it will be updated in the future. Unfortunately, the user agent does not know when this versioned URL design pattern is used.  As a result, user-driven refreshes still translate into wasted conditional requests for each sub-resource as each will return 304 responses. The "immutable" HTTP response Cache-Control extension allows servers to identify responses that will not be updated during their freshness lifetimes. This effectively informs clients that any conditional request for that response can be safely skipped without worrying that it has been updated. </ins> 2.  <ins> When present in an HTTP response, the "immutable" Cache-Control </ins> extension indicates that the origin server will not update the representation of that resource during the freshness lifetime of the response.