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Environment, then this sub-entity generates Evidence about its trustworthiness.  Therefore each sub-entity can be called an Attester.  Among these Attesters, there may be only some, which can <del> be called Lead Attesters, that have the communication functionality with the Verifier.  Other Attesters don't have this ability, but they are connected to the Lead Attesters via internal links or network </del>  connections, and they are evaluated via the Lead Attester's help. For example, a carrier-grade router is a composite device consisting of a chassis and multiple slots.  The trustworthiness of the router depends on all its slots' trustworthiness.  Each slot has an Attesting Environment such as a TPM or TEE collecting the claims of <del> its boot process, then it generates Evidence from the claims to prove its trustworthiness.  Among these slots, only a main slot can communicate with the Verifier while other slots cannot.  But other slots can communicate with the main slot by the links between them inside the router.  So the main slot collects the Evidence of other slots, produces the final Evidence of the whole router and conveys the final Evidence to the Verifier.  Therefore the router is a Composite Attester, each slot is an Attester and the main slot is the Lead Attester. Another example is a multi-chassis router which is composed of multiple single carrier-grade routers.  The multi-chassis router provides higher throughput by interconnecting multiple routers and simpler management by being logically treated as one router.  Among these routers, there is only one main router that connects to the Verifier.  Other routers are only connected to the main router by the network cables, and therefore they are managed and verified via this main router.  So, in this case, the multi-chassis router is the Composite Attester, each router is an Attester and the main router is the Lead Attester. composite depicts the data that flows between the Composite Attester and Verifier for the remote attestation. </del>  In the Composite Attester, each Attester generates its own Evidence <del> by its Attesting Environments collecting the claims from its Target Environments.  The Lead Attester collects the Evidence of all other </del>  Attesters and then generates the Evidence of the whole Composite Attester. <del> Inside the Lead Attester, there may be an optional Verifying Environment.  The Verifying Environment can verify the collected Evidence of other Attesters to evaluate their trustworthiness. Therefore, there are two situations when the Lead Attester generates the final Evidence. One situation is that the Lead Attester has no Verifying Environment. In this situation, the Lead Attester just collects the Evidence of other Attesters but doesn't verify them.  It may just string all these Evidence into a whole one, or it may reorganize these Evidence with a new structure and sign this final Evidence.  Then it conveys the final Evidence to the Verifier and the Verifier evaluates the Composite Attester's, including the Lead Attester's and other Attesters', trustworthiness. The other situation is that the Lead Attester has a Verifying Environment.  After collecting the Evidence of other Attesters, the Lead Attester verifies these Evidence by using the Endorsements and Appraisal Policies, which are got from the Verifier or some reliable parties, for evaluating these Attesters' trustworthiness.  Then the Lead Attester makes the verification results as claims which are the input to the final Evidence of the whole Composite Attester.  Then the Lead Attester conveys the final Attestation Evidence to the Verifier on behalf of the Composite Attester.  Before receiving the Endorsements and Appraisal Policies for other Attesters, to increase the security, the Lead Attester may first generate Evidence about its trustworthiness and convey this Evidence to the Verifier for evaluating. </del>  5.

Reviewer comments:
This attempts to address the remaining feedback on PR on issues that were not fixed before it was merged. Signed-off-by: Dave Thaler
The simple word choice / grammar changes seem OK. I still don't understand the difference between a "claims collector" and a "verifier" (in the case where Attester B, C,... are signing evidence) and a "target environment" (in the case where Attester B, C, ... are not signing evidence). It seems this term isn't actually necessary. The case where Composite Attester is relying Evidence from "sub" attesters, the composite attester (aka claims collector) is relying Evidence not "collecting claims" in the sense that an attester "collects claims about a target environment". I think it is confusing to overload this terminology to also mean "rely Evidence".

Revised text:
Environment, then this sub-entity generates Evidence about its trustworthiness.  Therefore each sub-entity can be called an Attester.  Among these Attesters, there may be only some, which can  <ins> be called Lead Attesters, that have the ability to communicate with the Verifier.  Other Attesters don't have this ability, but they are connected to the Lead Attesters via internal links or network </ins> connections, and they are evaluated via the Lead Attester's help. For example, a carrier-grade router is a composite device consisting of a chassis and multiple slots.  The trustworthiness of the router depends on all its slots' trustworthiness.  Each slot has an Attesting Environment such as a TPM or TEE collecting the claims of  <ins> its boot process, after which it generates Evidence from the claims. Among these slots, only a main slot can communicate with the Verifier while other slots cannot.  But other slots can communicate with the main slot by the links between them inside the router.  So the main slot collects the Evidence of other slots, produces the final Evidence of the whole router and conveys the final Evidence to the Verifier.  Therefore the router is a Composite Attester, each slot is an Attester, and the main slot is the Lead Attester. Another example is a multi-chassis router composed of multiple single carrier-grade routers.  The multi-chassis router provides higher throughput by interconnecting multiple routers and simpler management by being logically treated as one router.  Among these routers, there is only one main router that connects to the Verifier.  Other routers are only connected to the main router by the network cables, and therefore they are managed and verified via this main router.  So, in this case, the multi-chassis router is the Composite Attester, each router is an Attester and the main router is the Lead Attester. composite depicts the conceptual data flow for a Composite Attester. </ins> In the Composite Attester, each Attester generates its own Evidence  <ins> by its Attesting Environment(s) collecting the claims from its Target Environment(s).  The Lead Attester collects the Evidence of all other </ins> Attesters and then generates the Evidence of the whole Composite Attester.  <ins> The Lead Attester's Claims Collector may or may not include its own Verifier.  One situation is that the Claims Collector has no internal Verifier.  In this situation, the Claims Collecctor simply combines the various Evidences into the final Evidence that is sent off to the remote Verifier, which evaluates the Composite Attester's, including the Lead Attester's and other Attesters', trustworthiness. The other situation is that the Lead Attester's Claims Collector has an internal Verifier.  After collecting the Evidence of other Attesters, the Claims Collector verifies them using Endorsements and Appraisal Policies (obtained the same way as any other Verifier), for evaluating these Attesters' trustworthiness.  Then the Claims Collector combines the Attestation Results into the final Evidence of the whole Composite Attester which is sent off to the remote Verifier, which might treat the claims obtained from the local Attestation Results as if they were Evidence. </ins> 5.