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containing the traffic's destination.  Clients generate those URLs using a URI Template TEMPLATE, as described in client-config. <del> This protocol supports all versions of HTTP by using HTTP Datagrams HTTP-DGRAM.  When using HTTP/2 H2 or HTTP/3 H3, it uses HTTP Extended CONNECT as described in EXT-CONNECT2 and EXT-CONNECT3.  When using HTTP/1.x H1, it uses HTTP Upgrade as defined in HTTP. </del> <ins> This protocol supports all existing versions of HTTP by using HTTP Datagrams HTTP-DGRAM.  When using HTTP/2 H2 or HTTP/3 H3, it uses HTTP Extended CONNECT as described in EXT-CONNECT2 and EXT-CONNECT3. When using HTTP/1.x H1, it uses HTTP Upgrade as defined in HTTP. </ins> 1.1.

Discussion:
PR in response to Christer's GENART review -- Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review result: Almost Ready I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviews all IETF documents being processed by the IESG for the IETF Chair. Please treat these comments just like any other last call comments. For more information, please see the FAQ at . Document: draft-ietf-masque-connect-udp-12 Reviewer: Christer Holmberg Review Date: 2022-05-28 IETF LC End Date: 2022-06-08 IESG Telechat date: Not scheduled for a telechat Summary: The document is well written, and easy to read. However, I do have some comments (mainly editorial) that I would like the authors to address. Major issues: N/A Minor issues: N/A Nits/editorial comments: GENERAL: QG1: The document contains a mix of "SHALL", "MUST", "SHALL NOT" and "MUST NOT", but I can't see any specifc pattern based on whether "SHALL (NOT)" or "MUST (NOT)" is used. ABSTRACT: QA1: The text says: "This document describes how to proxy UDP in HTTP," To me "proxy UDP in HTTP" sounds a little weird. Isn't "tunneling UDP over HTTP" more appropriate? That terminology is also used later in the document. (The same comment applies to "proxy TCP in HTTP") Section 1: Q11: The text says: "While HTTP provides the CONNECT method (see Section 9.3.6 of [HTTP]) for creating a TCP [TCP] tunnel to a proxy, it lacks a method for doing so for UDP [UDP] traffic." I suggest to remove the "it lacks..." part, because the following paragraph says that the document defines such method. Q12: The text says: "This protocol supports all versions of HTTP" I think the text should say which is the latest supported, as there is no guarantee future versions of HTTP will be supported.

Section 1.1: Q111: The txt says: "Note that, when the HTTP version in use does not support multiplexing streams (such as HTTP/1.1), any reference to "stream" in this document represents the entire connection." I suggest to replace "Note that," with e.g., "In this document,", as in the paragraph above. Section 2: Q21: I suggest placing the example URIs after the requirements and procedures for creating the URL. Q22: The text says: "If the client detects that any of the requirements above are not met by a URI Template, the client MUST reject its configuration and fail the request without sending it to the UDP proxy. While clients SHOULD validate the requirements above, some clients MAY use a general-purpose URI Template implementation that lacks this specific validation." It sounds strange to say "MUST reject" while saying "SHOULD validate but MAY use a general-purpose URI Template implementation". I suggest to say "SHOULD validate the URI Template and reject it if it does not fulfil the requirements above". Section 3: Q31: (This comment might apply to other parts of the document too) The text says: "To initiate a UDP tunnel associated with a single HTTP stream, clients issue a request containing the "connect-udp" upgrade token." I suggest to refer to a single entity for the procedure, i.e., "client" instead of "clients". Section 3.1: Q311: The text says: "Upon receiving a UDP proxying request: if the recipient is configured to use another HTTP proxy, it will act as an intermediary: it forwards the request to another HTTP server. Note that such intermediaries may need to reencode the request if they forward it using a version of HTTP that is different from the one used to receive it, as the request encoding differs by version (see below). otherwise, the recipient will act as a UDP proxy: it extracts the "targethost" and "target_port" variables from the URI it has reconstructed from the request headers, and establishes a tunnel by directly opening a UDP socket to the requested target." It is unclear whether the rest of the Section text applies to both of these bullets, or only one of them. Also, the "(see below)" part in the first bullet refers to the following Sections, but it is unclear.

If refering to another section, I suggest using explicit Section references instead of "below". Sections 3.2, 3.3, 3.4 and 3.5: I suggest to use sub-sections, with e.g., the following structure: HTTP/1.1 Usage Request Response HTTP/2 and HTTP/3 Usage Request Response Section 4: The text says: "This protocol..." What protocol? :) As this is the first sentence of the Section, please be specific.