There is a problem with the translation of my master thesis'  English abstract - Page 1
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author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 02:45:28 am
content: I am a Chinese student and I am writing my master degree thesis recently.The grammar of the English abstract in my paper is not standard. I hope someone whose native language is English can provide suggestions or help point out mistakes.thanks----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------2022-4-7My tutor has revised my English abstract and he wants me to ask the English speakers in the forum if the revised abstract can be readWith reference to your suggestions, I reorganized my abstract again.I know there are still a lot of questions, I hope you can help me point them out：Abstract（latest version）Line loss rate is an important parameter for quantifying grid transmission efficiency. Primary causes usually include leakage, partial discharge, and illegal use of electricity, among others. Such losses cause both financial harm to electric utilities and danger to users. The current abnormal line loss detection methods is power line carrier detection combined with manual detection. because the watt-hour meters are installed at a fixed and dispersive location, the power line communication method is inconvenience. The clock in the watt-hour meters is inaccurate, it causes large errors in the calculation of line loss rate. Manual detection faces the problems of high labor cost and low efficiency.To solve the problem of line loss monitoring and troubleshooting in low-voltage stations, an abnormal loss detection system for power grids based on IoT is designed.In this thesis, we designs five kinds of line loss detection devices for three kinds of power supply areas : 1.centralized area; 2.distributed area; 3.freestanding area.This system locates faults by modeling the power network as a tree topology, and measuring at each node the total input power, branch line output power, and user power. Considering the system's wide distribution and system price, the NB-IoT module is used for uploading data from each location. To ensure efficient transmission, the MQTT/HTTP protocol is used to communicate over the internet. An internet time service facilitates real-time synchronous monitoring, reducing calculation errors. By calculating the line loss rate of each node, the system can identify when and where the line loss exceeds usual or expected amount.This experiment proves that the system can make the current power industry line loss monitoring smarter, reducing the amount of work.Keywords: Low-voltage power supply area; Line loss monitoring; Tree topology;NB-IoT; Fault point Locating;

author: bob91343
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 04:47:19 am
content: It's diffult to read. If I were to 'correct' this, I would probably rewrite it to make it seem more standard. The rewrite would take some time and perhaps would have some errors itself that you might want corrected.

author: eti
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 05:02:23 am
content: The typeface, formatting and the punctuation are just awful. I agree that's a headache to read.

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 05:17:38 am
content: Thank you, I would like to ask whether the technical terms in the abstract are accurate, such as the line loss ratemeter box

author: Kjelt
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 09:43:29 am
content: I am not native english but I think it should be "mains loss" or "mains dropout", at least when you are referring about the 110VAC or 230VAC mains power grid ?

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 12:03:39 pm
content: Thanks for your advice

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 12:16:53 pm
content: Quote from: Kjelt on December 04, 2021, 09:43:29 amWhat I want to describe is the loss in the entire power transmission process，I don’t think “mains loss” can cover the loss of all transmission lines.Is my opinion correct?

author: m98
author_rank: Frequent Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 12:29:04 pm
content: If you want anyone to help you out, please post a text file. Feel like I'm getting a headache after the first three sentences.

author: xrunner
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 01:02:19 pm
content: I ran it through OCR. It's readable. I did some cleanup myself but still a lot of apostrophes (just ignore and delete as needed)

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 01:15:39 pm
content: Thank you for your replies. I tried to make some corrections to my abstract.

author: Power-Electronics
author_rank: Contributor
timestamp: December 04, 2021, 02:57:38 pm
content: I don't know if I even understood everything correctly, but here's my take on it. It still needs a lot of editing for style and content, but at least it should be somewhat understandable now. Most of what I did was remove the unnecessary repetition and add some white space. Good luck.AbstractLine loss rate is an important parameter for quantifying grid transmission efficiency, and overall quality of power supply system. Primary causes usually include leakage, partial discharge, and illegal use of electricity, among others. Such losses cause both financial harm to power supply enterprises and danger to users. To solve the problem of line loss monitoring and troubleshooting in low-voltage stations, an abnormal loss detection system for power grids based on location is designed.In this paper, we design five kinds of line loss detection devices for different power supply areas:1. Urban building meter boxes2. Rural (residential?) meter boxes3. Rural (residential?) transmission-line-side devices4. Factory transformer tanks5. Factory meter boxesThis system locates faults by modeling the power network as a tree topology, and measuring at each node the total input power, branch line output power, and user power.Considering the system's wide distribution and system cost, the NB-IoT module is used for uploading data from each location. To ensure efficient transmission, the MQTT/HTTP protocol is used to communicate over the internet. An internet time service facilitates real-time synchronous monitoring, reducing calculation errors. By calculating the line loss rate of each node, the system can identify when and where the line loss exceeds usual or expected amount.This experiment (design?) proves that the system can make the current power industry line loss monitoring smarter, reducing workload.Keywords: Low-voltage power supply area; Line loss monitoring; Tree topology;NB-IoT; Fault point Locating;

author: amyk
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: December 05, 2021, 03:13:02 am
content: I must be used to reading Chinglish by now, since it's about as comprehensible as a lot of the datasheets from Chinese companies that I've seen.

author: CatalinaWOW
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: December 05, 2021, 03:48:02 am
content: I believe that correct translation in American English for "power supply enterprises" is "electric utilities", and "power supply system" would be "electrical distribution system".I don't know if you are trying to achieve a particular dialect of English or if those would be correct in other widely used dialects.

author: Gregg
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: December 05, 2021, 04:07:36 am
content: @ Newboy:Obviously you have thought about your topic extensively; but you need to convey this to your audience. I guess you are submitting this to native English speaking audiences whose thought processes differ from yours; there is nothing wrong with your thought process, it just doesn’t translate well.It may help to do a rough draft in outline form:1. Define in detail the problem or whatever you are trying to accomplish[This focuses and sets the scope of your paper; it is very important to define the subject at the beginning of the paper]2. Mention present conditions and what is being done to alleviate the problem indicated.[This doesn’t have to go into great detail, but must convey a need or desire for improvement]3. Provide a list of possible solutions (stick to the problem stated). State why present solutions are not ideal. This part must be well organized and not confusing.4. State your own solution along with its pros and cons and compare it to the present situation. Stating the negative aspects to your solution shows that you have been diligent in researching both the solutions and present problems.5. Summarize your paper with projected cost effectiveness, long term reliability and overall efficiency.Remember to thank those who have helped you along the way….and pay it forward when you can.

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: December 08, 2021, 11:59:17 pm
content: I put the latest revision abstract in #0 I know there are still a lot of questions, I hope you can help me point them out

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: January 11, 2022, 01:07:10 am
content: yesterday,My supervisor said that the English abstract part of my master's thesis is very poor, I don't know how to correct it.Hope someone can help me===========================================================================Line loss rate is an important parameter for quantifying grid transmission efficiency, and overall quality of electrical distribution system, Primary causes usually include leakage, partial discharge, and illegal use of electricity, among others. Such losses cause both financial harm to electric utilities and danger to users. The current abnormal line loss detection methods are power line carrier detection and manual detection. because the watt-hour meters are installed at a fixed and dispersive location, the power line communication method is inconvenience. The clock in the watt-hour meters is inaccurate, it causes large errors in the calculation of line loss rate. Manual detection faces the problems of high labor cost and low efficiency.To solve the problem of line loss monitoring and troubleshooting in low-voltage stations, an abnormal loss detection system for power grids based on IoT is designed.In this thesis, we designs five kinds of line loss detection devices for three kinds of power supply areas : 1.urban building; 2.rural residential; 3.factory area.This system locates faults by modeling the power network as a tree topology, and measuring at each node the total input power, branch line output power, and user power. Considering the system's wide distribution and system cost, the NB-IoT module is used for uploading data from each location. To ensure efficient transmission, the MQTT/HTTP protocol is used to communicate over the internet. An internet time service facilitates real-time synchronous monitoring, reducing calculation errors. By calculating the line loss rate of each node, the system can identify when and where the line loss exceeds usual or expected amount.This experiment proves that the system can make the current power industry line loss monitoring smarter, reducing workload.

author: IanB
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: January 11, 2022, 02:51:04 am
content: For one thing, I think "line loss" is "transmission loss" or "transmission losses".I think for "partial discharge" you mean "corona discharge"?You really need to find a native English speaker at your institution to help you. There is no way for anyone here to edit your text without risk of changing the meaning.

author: jimdeane
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timestamp: January 19, 2022, 07:53:32 pm
content: Textcheck.com provides techncal editing services for a primarily asian market. I worked as an editor for them for a couple of years. The editors are people with demonstrated technical background related to that of the author. For example, as a physics master's student, I edited a lot of photonics papers.An important note: They are not editing for scientific accuracy, but for technical language accuracy. They might give you feedback in the notes if something was ambiguous.

author: China NewBoy
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timestamp: April 07, 2022, 06:41:46 am
content: Quote from: jimdeane on January 19, 2022, 07:53:32 pmThank you for your recommendation, but, if it is calculated at 6 cents per word, I need to spend 1000RMB to complete the polish, it is too expensive for me

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: April 07, 2022, 06:45:54 am
content: My tutor has revised my English abstract and he wants me to ask the English speakers in the forum if the revised abstract can be readLine loss rate is an important parameter for quantifying grid transmission efficiency. Primary causes usually include leakage, partial discharge, and illegal use of electricity, among others. Such losses cause both financial harm to electric utilities and danger to users. The current abnormal line loss detection methods is power line carrier detection combined with manual detection. because the watt-hour meters are installed at a fixed and dispersive location, the power line communication method is inconvenience. The clock in the watt-hour meters is inaccurate, it causes large errors in the calculation of line loss rate. Manual detection faces the problems of high labor cost and low efficiency.To solve the problem of line loss monitoring and troubleshooting in low-voltage stations, an abnormal loss detection system for power grids based on IoT is designed.In this thesis, we designs five kinds of line loss detection devices for three kinds of power supply areas : 1.centralized area; 2.distributed area; 3.freestanding area.This system locates faults by modeling the power network as a tree topology, and measuring at each node the total input power, branch line output power, and user power. Considering the system's wide distribution and system price, the NB-IoT module is used for uploading data from each location. To ensure efficient transmission, the MQTT/HTTP protocol is used to communicate over the internet. An internet time service facilitates real-time synchronous monitoring, reducing calculation errors. By calculating the line loss rate of each node, the system can identify when and where the line loss exceeds usual or expected amount.This experiment proves that the system can make the current power industry line loss monitoring smarter, reducing the amount of work.

author: jonpaul
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: April 07, 2022, 09:47:39 am
content: Hello: What is the target audience and institutions or journals? IEEE? USA Universities? Firms to hire you? Your professor in China?What is the goal or objective of the paper?The issues of power TX and DIS mon are very different in USA or EU vs for instance China or 3rd world.For example the losses of thief of power are minor in the West but very bad in India.Finally line loss monitoring is very well developed and deployed in US and EU, so what exactly is the issue you are addressing?You need a T&D or power electrical engineer to review, not an informal EEVblog forum.Bon Chance,Jon

author: China NewBoy
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timestamp: April 07, 2022, 11:45:08 am
content: Quote from: jonpaul on April 07, 2022, 09:47:39 am

author: thm_w
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: April 07, 2022, 10:01:59 pm
content: You quoted his post but didn't write anyhting?Anyway, I've added suggestions below:Quote from: China NewBoy on April 07, 2022, 06:45:54 amSome structure could be changed but, this is simple recommendations without rewriting your ideas.One part I'm not sure about: "Because the watt-hour meters are installed at a fixed and dispersive location"You are saying they are dispersed too far apart right?"Considering the systems wide distribution and system price, the NB-IoT module is used for uploading data from each location."Not quite sure what is meant here

author: HuronKing
author_rank: Frequent Contributor
timestamp: April 07, 2022, 10:29:12 pm
content: Quote from: thm_w on April 07, 2022, 10:01:59 pmHe did but I think he wrote it in the wrong spot because its inside the quote. He wrote,QuoteProbably in response to the question, 'what are you writing this for?'

author: Cerebus
author_rank: Super Contributor
timestamp: April 07, 2022, 10:58:50 pm
content: OK, I basically did a complete re-write based on the existing material. The questions in [] brackets do not form part of the text - this is an editors/sub-editors convention for inserting questions and suggestions for clarification.This thesis presents the design of an IoT system designed to monitor losses in low-voltage power distribution grids. Detecting, quantifying and troubleshooting grid loses is important in maintaining grid efficiency. The system presented can make power industry line loss monitoring smarter, improving efficiency.Causes of losses include leakage, partial discharge, [What is "partial discharge" intended to describe? The meaning in unclear.] and illegal use of electricity. These losses cause financial harm to electric utilities and can be dangerous for grid users.Current detection and measurement methods rely on watt-hour meters at widely dispersed fixed installations, either read manually or communicating readings automatically by superimposing a communications signal on the power lines. Clocks in watt-hour meters making automatic reports are often inaccurate leading to errors in calculations of line losses reported. Communication over power lines can be unreliable. Manual meter readings involve high labour costs and low efficiency.In this thesis, we present the design of five kinds of line loss detection devices for three kinds of power supply areas: centralized, distributed, and freestanding areas. [What do these 'areas' represent. It isn't clear.] This system locates faults by modeling the power network as a tree topology, and measuring at each node the total input power, branch line output power, and power delivered to end users. A narrowband IoT (NB-IoT) module is used for uploading data from each location, chosen becuase of the wide availability and low price of NB-IoT modules. Readings are communicated over the Internet using the MQTT/HTTP protocol. An Internet time service facilitates real-time synchronous monitoring, reducing calculation errors. By calculating the line loss rate of each node, the system can identify when and where line losses exceed usual or expected amount.

author: China NewBoy
author_rank: Regular Contributor
timestamp: April 08, 2022, 01:06:17 am
content: theses areas in pictures

author: China NewBoy
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timestamp: April 08, 2022, 01:48:21 am
content: Quote from: Cerebus on April 07, 2022, 10:58:50 pmThank you so much, it really looks better than before