It couldnt be worse than it is now I thought you did fine yesterday It looks like Teammm didnt note your comment above before editing it back and adding the wikilink  By moved into the second graf do you mean that grafs    should be combined as they are now or that the exception info should precede the sentence about DOMA I think providing detail about jurisdictions before shifting to the denial of federal recognition reads more smoothly The material about jurisdictions is overly detailed as well Id drop the names of the tribes and find a way to say the issue is on the ballot in  states without worrying about initiative vs referendum I guess were struck with the CA exception