In broad strokes this looks like the right kind of outline for a biography Be sure to take a look at some other scientist biography articles to see how the very beginning of article is expected to look The entire lead section should be a concise summary of the article while the begging of the lead section is an even more concise summary highlighting the most important things youd want a reader to know if they were going to stop after one paragraph and the first sentence can be thought of almost like a dictionary definition of the topic of the article There must be a mistake in either the date of death  or the date he took over as editor of Physiological Zoology