It is not at all hard to read and the lede is elegant and excellent It may not suit your taste though And BMKs lies are a personal attack I will defend myself As for collegiality if BMKs behavior is an example of what you regard as collegiality then you dont understand what that word means If you or he has a problem with the article I strongly suggest you offer your ideas  one at a time  for discussion in order to reach a consensus before making changes Thats my idea of collegiality