Excuseme you seem to edit a lot of articles that I keep on my watchlist but I have a large watchlist   I agree with you that the lead is bad   Angela Lansbury and Jack Nicholson dont belong there   It is relevant to mention her debut but its not necessary to mention Jane Fonda   You make valid points and I think youve tried to fix it but have ended up focussing just on the awards   As per s suggestion  WPLEAD covers the requirements    Maybe you should read through some of the lead sections of some featured articles   Maybe even someone like Audrey Hepburn which has a fairly substantial lead and try to create a summary of the article rather than a list of accolades