I have built on your edits and included several votes I did not have in my version  However there are two major changes you will note   You had too many categories and this made for a choppy article  You almost had a header and then one sentence  I have grouped them into larger headers  You had numerous places where you use derogatory language or tone  I have removed those  Please let me know what specifically I left out that you would like to include or if you believe there is language that is too rosy about Debicella