Census  Another highly interesting section I have a few relatively minor editorial suggestions  First paragraph The writing is excellent up to the sentence which begins Among the problems facing Walker included This wording is not grammatically correct Better to write something like The problems facing Walker included  First paragraph I cant fully understand the sentence I refer to above For example I think there needs to be a fuller explanation of the marshalls involvement as well as the influence of local political interests Id say a bit more information is needed to fully explain why Walker had no control over key aspects of the Census  First paragraph The last sentence needs more explanation You appear to be referring to additional problems that Walker faced You need to be explicit about this and you need to add something  such as the word only  to indicate more clearly why conducting a Census five years after the war is a problem for Walker  Second paragraph I notice that you start capitalizing Census while using lower case in the first paragraph You need to be consistent I think you should probably capitalize it but Im not absolutely sure You might consult your source materials to see how this issue is handled  Second paragraph Not sure what you mean by confluence  Second paragraph If its possible you might include a brief description of Walkers health problems He seems to have been troubled by ill health all his life yet he accomplished a great deal  Second paragraph The length of the second sentence makes it difficult to absorb all the information in it in a single reading  Second paragraph I also found the third sentence a bit too long and I had forgotten who Bowles was There needs to be a better explanation of what you mean by go around  Second paragraph What do you mean by visual statistics Charts and graphs or something else  Second paragraph Im wondering why its the Smithsonian Institute and not Institution