Original sentence: Bill's mother, Elinor Fife Knowland died on July 20, 1908, less than a month after his birth.When the San Francisco Chronicle and San Francisco Examiner returned, Tribune sales fell in home delivery and on-the-street sales
Edited sentence: Sadly for Knowland and the Tribune, when the San Francisco Chronicle and San Francisco Examiner returned, Tribune sales fell in home delivery and on-the-street sales.Sadly, Bill's mother, Elinor Fife Knowland died on July 20, 1908, less than a month after his birth