Original sentence: As the South has become more prosperous, this area has become a major vacation and retirement spot for Southerners who enjoy its vast, fine-grained white sand beaches, and its inlet-filled bays; it also has become a leading destination of college students for their spring break.Eglin developed the "bunker buster" BLU-82 bomb that would later be used in Afghanistan and Iraq, this was the test site for the largest conventional bomb in the U.The 1st Congressional District includes the end of the Florida Panhandle, so far west it's in the Central time zone--which became a sore point in the 2000 Election when some TV networks declared Al Gore the winner of Florida's electoral votes ten minutes before the polls in the Panhandle closed.The Air Force also has a massive presence in Eglin Air Force Base.elected in a special election following the resignation of Joe Scarborough
Edited sentence: As the South has become more prosperous, this American Riviera has become a major vacation and retirement spot for Southerners who enjoy its vast, fine-grained white sand beaches, perhaps the finest in the country, and its pleasant inlet-filled bays; it also has become a leading destination of college students for their spring break.Eglin developed the "bunker buster" BLU-82 bomb that would later be used in Afghanistan and in March 2003, this was the test site for the largest conventional bomb in the U.The 1st Congressional District includes the end of the Panhandle, so far west it's in the Central time zone--which became a sore point in the 2000 Election when some TV networks declared Al Gore the winner of Florida's electoral votes ten minutes before the polls in the Panhandle closed.The Air Force also has a massive presence in Eglin Air Force Base, which spreads over the lion's share of three counties.elected in a special election following the untimely and unexpected resignation of Joe Scarborough who wanted to re-enter private life, only to sign on to MSNBC for his own cable talk show