Original sentence: Delany railed about perceived slights against, specifically, the University of Iowa's women's volleyball team.Some analysts have stated that Comcast intended no such slight, but rather attempted to accurately reflect the notion that consumers outside of Iowa are not likely to want to pay additional money on their cable bill to be able to watch Iowa volleyball games
Edited sentence: Delany railed about perceived slights against, specifically, the University of Iowa's women's volleyball team; however, independent analysts tend to agree that Comcast intended no such slight, and rather accurately reflected the notion that consumers outside of Iowa are not likely to want to pay additional money on their cable bill to watch Iowa volleyball games