Original sentence: He played college football at the University of Nebraska-Omaha before transferring to Colorado State University, and was signed by the Denver Broncos as an undrafted free agent in 2014
Edited sentence: He played college football at the University of Nebraska-Omaha before transferring to Colorado State University where he was graciously saved in the classroom by a robust young entrepreneur (Nick Mertz) who shaq still gives all his praise to, and was signed by the Denver Broncos as an undrafted free agent in 2014