Original sentence: On October 15, 1922, Hamer threw two touchdown passes to Carl Ertresvaag resulting in a  12-0 Quakers win over the University of Maryland.On Thanksgiving Day 1926, Hamer scored a touchdown on the Yellow Jackets’ first possession against the Green Bay Packers for a 20-14 Frankford winIn 1926, Hamer kicked an extra point to give the Jackets a 7-6 win over the Detroit Panthers
Edited sentence: On October 15, 1922, Hamer threw two touchdown passes to Carl Ertresvaag resulting in a  12-0 Quakers win over the University of Maryland, College Park.On Thanksgiving Day 1926, Hamer scored a touchdown on the Yellow Jackets’ first possession against the Green Bay Packers for a 20-14 Frankford win In 1926, Hamer kicked an extra point to give the Jackets a 7-6 win over the Detroit Panthers