Original sentence: " In addition, safety improvements between 2002 and 2005 were "largely focused on personal safety — such as slips, trips, falls, and vehicle accidents, rather than on improving safety performance," according to Supervisory Investigator Don Holstrom.Carolyn W.The report suggested that cost-cutting and production pressure from BP executives may have resulted in a lack of needed safety measures across the board
Edited sentence: " In addition, inadequate safety improvements between 2002 and 2005 were "largely focused on personal safety — such as slips, trips, falls, and vehicle accidents, rather than on improving safety performance," according to Supervisory Investigator Don Holstrom.The report suggested that cost-cutting and production pressure from BP executives may have resulted in a lack of needed safety measures across the board Carolyn W