Original sentence: Due to an illness (later revealed to be a brain hemorrhage) he was admitted in hospital a week prior to his death, which caused him to slip into a coma resulting in his death
Edited sentence: Although Alhaj Khursheed Ahmed left the world surprisingly, but left behind a great legacy.Due to a illness (later revealed to be a brain hemorrhage) he was addmitted in hospital a week prior to his death, which caused him to slip into a coma resulting in his death.His life is a great example for those who are astray from their beliefs and are looking toward an inspiration