Original sentence: The pair began alternately creating chapters, working together regularly on visits to Tourette Sur Loup over the spring and summer of 1957, and according to Southern himself the project was conceived and written well before it was introduced to publisher Maurice Girodias, probably by Marilyn Meeske, who, according to Southern, though Girodias would be interested in it as a "dirty book"
Edited sentence: The pair began alternately creating chapters, working together regularly on visits to Tourette Sur Loup over the spring and summer of 1957, and according to Southern himself the project was conceived and written well before it was introduced to publisher Maurice Girodias, probably by Marilyn Meeske, who, according to Southern, thought Girodias would be interested in it as a "dirty book"