Original sentence: A proud atheist, Toynbee is an Honorary Associate of the National Secular Society.After attending the Holland Park Comprehensive School (she had failed the Eleven Plus examination) she read history at St Anne's College, Oxford, but dropped out before completing her degree
Edited sentence: After attending the Holland Park Comprehensive School (she had failed the Eleven Plus examination) she read history at St Anne's College, Oxford, but left the program before completing her degree.An impassioned atheist, Toynbee is an Honorary Associate of the National Secular Society