Original sentence: On July 8 2009 Battlefield 1943 was released for the Xbox 360 via Xbox LIVE Arcade, and the Playstation 3 version was released via the Playstation Network two days after on July 10
Edited sentence: On 8 July 2009, Battlefield 1943 was released for the Xbox 360 via Xbox LIVE Arcade, and the Playstation 3 version was released via the Playstation Network two days after on 10 July