Original sentence: He claims that the average man in a civilized society is less wealthy, in practice, than one in a "savage" society.The answer he gives is self-sufficiency, which he finds is enough to cover one's basic needs.Thoreau has criticised the division of labour in his Walden (published in 1854), on the basis that it removes people from a sense of connectedness with society and with the world at large, including nature.Thoreau's friend and mentor Ralph Waldo Emerson criticizes the division of labor in "The American Scholar"; a widely-informed, holistic citizenry is vital for the spiritual and physical health of the country
Edited sentence: He claimed that the average man in a civilized society is less wealthy, in practice, than one in a "savage" society.The answer he gave was that self-sufficiency was enough to cover one's basic needs.Thoreau criticized the division of labour in Walden (published in 1854), on the basis that it removes people from a sense of connectedness with society and with the world at large, including nature.Thoreau's friend and mentor, Ralph Waldo Emerson, criticized the division of labor in "The American Scholar"; a widely-informed, holistic citizenry is vital for the spiritual and physical health of the country