Original sentence: HMS Raleigh was the flagship of the North Atlantic & West Indies squadron and the town of Raleigh is named after her.In 1922, the Royal Navy cruiser HMS Raleigh ran aground across the straits in Labrador.Locals were proud of their community and Raleigh dominated the local hockey league.Raleigh has a harbour with Burnt Cape on one side to protect against the elements in the very harsh winters - which can see 40 foot snowbanks after a winter storm.Recently Raleigh has attracted world wide scientific interest after several species of plants found nowhere else on earth except Burnt Cape were found.With abundant fish in nearby rivers, the Raleigh area is popular for ice fishing
Edited sentence: HMS Raleigh was the flagship of the North Atlantic & West Indie squadron and the Town of Raleigh is named after it.In 1922, a man-o-war named HMS Raleigh drove ashore across the straits in Labrador.Locals were proud of their community and Raleigh dominated the local hockey league (much to the dismay of much larger St.Raleigh has what is possibly the perfect harbour with burnt cape on one side to protect against the elements in the very harsh winters - which can see 40 foot snowbanks after a winter storm.Recently Raleigh has attracted world wide scientific interest after several species of plants found nowhere else on earth except burnt cape were found.With a very abundant amount of fish in nearby rivers, the Raleigh area is one of the best places anywhere for ice fishing