Original sentence: Schenirer saw the high rate of assimilation amongst these girls due to the secular influences of the non-Jewish schools that the girls were then attending.While boys could attend yeshivas, at that time there was no formalized system of Jewish education for girls and young Jewish women
Edited sentence: In contrast to the boys, who generally attended Yeshivas, at that time there was no formalized system of Jewish education for girls and young Jewish women.Schenirer saw the alarming rate of assimilation amongst these girls due to the secular influences of the non-Jewish schools that the girls were then attending