Original sentence: Grunge music(sometimes also referred to as the Seattle Sound) is a genre of alternative rock inspired by hardcore punk, heavy metal, and indie rock.Grunge, however, sharply contrasted glam metal; its lyrics avoided machismo and used a simpler style similar to punk.It became commercially successful in the early 1990s, peaking in mainstream popularity between 1991 and 1994.With a viable alternative to hair metal realized by the public, the popularity of glam metal began to die off as the popularity of grunge began to rise
Edited sentence: ) With a viable alternative to hair metal realized by the public, the popularity of glam metal began to die off as the popularity of grunge began to rise.Grunge music (sometimes also referred to as the Seattle Sound) is a genre of alternative rock inspired by hardcore punk, heavy metal, and indie rock.Grunge, however, sharply contrasted glam metal; its lyrics avoided machismo and used a simpler style similar to punk, (though many times far more emotional, and far more intelligent.It became extremely commercially successful in the early 1990s, peaking in mainstream popularity between 1991 and 1994