Original sentence: From 2004-10 Okur displayed a talent for making big shots in pressure situations - earning him the nickname of "The Money Man" and "Memo is Money" amongst Jazz fans.He was known for his three point shooting and ability to space the floor.In his 7 seasons with the Utah Jazz, Mehmet Okur emerged as one of the premier shooting players in the NBA.On September 13, 2016, Okur was named a player development coach for the Phoenix Suns, becoming the first Turkish citizen to enter the coaching world in the NBA
Edited sentence: From 2004-10 Okur displayed an uncanny knack for making big shots in pressure situations - earning him the nickname of "The Money Man" and "Memo is Money" amongst Jazz fans.He was known for his terrific three point shooting and ability to space the floor.In his 7 seasons with the Utah Jazz, Mehmet Okur not only emerged as one of the premier shooting bigs in the NBA - he also became one of the league's most feared shooters in the clutch.On September 13, 2016, Okur was officially named a player development coach for the Phoenix Suns, thus becoming the first Turkish citizen to enter the coaching world in the NBA