Original sentence: Although company-led attempts to improve the working conditions in sweatshops such as the Ethical Trading Initiative (ETI) have had some successes, others criticize the ETI as ‘gender-blind’.Because of this, some argue that efforts to combat the poor working conditions in sweatshops should focus more on empowering women.The modern anti-sweatshop movement combines notions of a living wage, trade unions, and feminism, which some argue makes these grassroots approaches more sustainable
Edited sentence: Although company-led attempts to improve the working conditions in sweatshops such as the Ethical Trading Initiative (ETI) have had some successes, they have been accused of being ‘gender-blind’.One of the strengths of the anti-sweatshop movement is that it combines notions of a living wage and trade unions with a feminist understanding of sweatshops which makes these grassroots approaches more sustainable because they better understand the nature of the problem.This would suggest that efforts to combat the poor working conditions in sweatshops should focus more on empowering women