Original sentence: Additionally, due to extraordinarily high levels of employee attrition, Accenture is built on the need for enormous recruitment, particularly at the entry level.If, for some reason, the firm was no longer able to recruit the enormous number of graduates it requires each year - or was unable to attract a high quality of graduate - this model would falter.In practice, however, this system has a tendency to dilute leadership, as individuals who may be better oriented toward upper management and executive positions leave the firm before promotion to those levels is possible.This system promotes vitality in the firm, theoretically allowing only the strongest performers to reach leadership positions
Edited sentence: However, it is built on the need for enormous recruitment at the entry level of the firm as huge numbers of employees move on every year.If for some reason the firm was unable to recruit the enormous number of graduates it requires each year - or was unable to attract a high quality of graduate - this model would fail to replenish itself.This system promotes vitality in the firm, allowing only the strongest performers to reach leadership positions