Original sentence: A sniper under the alias "Scorpio" (Andy Robinson) murders a young woman in a San Francisco high-rise rooftop swimming pool using a high-powered rifle from the top of the 555 California Street skyscraper.Infuriated that his plans have twice been foiled, Scorpio kidnaps a teenage girl, rapes her, and buries her alive.The children escape unharmed while Scorpio runs into a nearby rock quarry
Edited sentence: A serial killer who calls himself "Scorpio" (Andy Robinson) murders a young woman in a San Francisco high-rise rooftop swimming pool using a high-powered rifle from the top of the 555 California Street skyscraper.Infuriated that his plans have twice been foiled, Scorpio kidnaps a teenage girl, rapes her and buries her alive.The children escape while Scorpio runs into a nearby rock quarry