Original sentence: Queen Elizabeth II of the United Kingdom and the other 15 Commonwealth realms, is the second person to be recognised as Head of the Commonwealth (which currently has 53 members).The official French version (for use in Canada) is Chef du Commonwealth; the South African version in Afrikaans is Hoof van die Statebond' (literally 'Chief of the confederation', while the common Afrikaans word for Commonwealth is Gemenebes'').These include the 16 Commonwealth realms (where the Queen is also head of state, separately from her roles as Head of the Commonwealth), Commonwealth republics, and monarchies under another dynasty (as in Tonga, Malaysia, Swaziland, etc
Edited sentence: The official French version (for use in Canada) is Chef du Commonwealth; the South African version in Afrikaans is Hoof van die Statebond (literally 'Chief of the confederation', while the common Afrikaans word for Commonwealth is Gemenebes).The present holder of the thrones of the Commonwealth Realms, Elizabeth II, is the second person to be recognised as Head of the Commonwealth in the 53 member states of the Commonwealth of Nations.These include the sixteen Commonwealth Realms (where the person is also head of state, separately from her roles as Head of the Commonwealth), Commonwealth republics, and monarchies under another dynasty (as in Tonga, Malaysia, Swaziland, etc