Original sentence: The application was criticized for its lack of user-friendliness, openness to potential hacks and data intercepts, and conflict of interest due to its connections with Kirsten Gillibrand, a PAC founded by Tom Steyer, Pete Buttigieg, Joe Biden, and former staffers for Hillary Clinton among others
Edited sentence: The application was criticized for its lack of user-friendliness, openness to potential hacks and data intercepts, and conflict of interest due to its connections with Pete Buttigieg, Joe Biden, and former staffers for Hillary Clinton