Original sentence: While O'Leary has begun what appears to be a moderately successful turnaround of a program that went nearly two years without a win, the continuing failure of UCF to beat perceived in-state rival USF has again started a groundswell of discontent within the fervent Golden Knights fanbase
Edited sentence: While O'Leary has begun what appears to be a moderately successful turnaround of a program that went nearly two years without a win, the continuing failure of UCF to beat perceived in-state rival USF has again started a groundswell of discontent within the rabid Golden Knights fanbase