Original sentence: Going agianst their word, the Comanche chiefs did not return all of their captives and in fact held back captives to guarantee their own safety.Her nose having been burned off with hot coals, her nostrils were now just large pussing scabs.Other captives were with bands of the Comanche not represented at the talks.The Comanches were killed.The Texas militiamen told the chiefs they would indeed themselves be held hostage to guarantee the release of the white captives.The chiefs drew their weapons and the militia began firing
Edited sentence: For their entertainment the Comanches had burned off her nose with hot coals.Going against their word, the Comanche chiefs did not return all of the captives in their control and in fact held back white captives to guarantee their own safety.Her nostrils were now just gaping puss oozing holes.Other white captives were with bands of the Comanche not represented at the talks.The Texas militiamen told the chiefs it was they that would indeed be held hostage to guarantee the release of the other white captives in their control.The chiefs realizing their miscalculation paniced and drew their weapons.The militia began firing and the Comanches were killed