Original sentence: Joseph Rinaldi (class of 1944) - jazz musician, he spent his early years with Big Bands such as Gene Krupa and Harry James; later fronted his own Dixieland band, The Foggy Bottom Six, as well as The Joe Rinaldi Jazz Quintet.Patrick Noonan (class of 1960) - Conservation pioneer in bringing business and environmental interests together; Founder and Chairman Emeritus of The Conservation Fund
Edited sentence: Joseph Rinaldi (class of 1944) World renowned jazz musician, he spent his early years with Big Bands such as Gene Krupa and Harry James; later fronted his own Dixieland Jazz Band The Foggy Bottom Six as well as his own Jazz Band, The Joe Rinaldi Jazz Quintet; appeared with Judy Garland and as a performer at the Newport Jazz Festival.Patrick Noonan (class of 1960) - Conservation visionary and pioneer in bringing business and environmental interests together; Founder and Chairman Emeritus of The Conservation Fund