Original sentence: Opponents of fur farming state that, as with other intensive-confinement animal farmsc, the methods used on fur factory farms are designed to maximize profits.Other methods include poisons (particularly strychnine and plant killers), and neck breaking.This growing demand has led to the development of extensive fur farming operations in countries such as China, where activist groups such as People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals have raised concerns about what they allege to be inhumane treatment of animals and the nature of slaughterhouse practices
Edited sentence: Opponents of fur farming state that, as with other intensive-confinement animal farms, the methods used on fur factory farms are designed to maximize profits.Some inhumane methods include poisons (particularly strychnine and plant killers), and neck breaking.This growing demand has led to the development of extensive fur farming operations in countries such as China, where activist groups such as People for the Ethical Treatment of Animals have raised concerns about the inhumane treatment of animals and the nature of slaughterhouse practices