Original sentence: A further feminist claim is that when childcare and housework are taken into consideration, women work longer than men in both the industrialised and developing world, (by 20% in the industrialised world, and 30% in the developing world).Feminists claim that women own only 1% of the world's wealth, and earn 10% of the world's income, despite making up 51% of the population.It is claimed by others that this is due to the extra time men spend in the workforce
Edited sentence: When childcare and housework are taken into consideration, Women work longer than men in both the industrialised and developing world, (by 20% in the industrialised world, and 30% in the developing world).Women own only 1% of the world's wealth, and earn 10% of the world's income, despite making up 51% of the population