Original sentence: A local bus service runs up and down the mountain every 30 minutes during weekdays.The Mount Nelson Pharmacy, which serves the growing number of elderly and retired residents.The Mount Nelson Tavern serves meals and also doubles as a place for the local residents to meet and enjoy a beer over a game of pool.The main road in Mount Nelson is Nelson Road, which extends up the mountain from the Wrest Point Hotel Casino in the suburb of Sandy Bay.There is a picnic area nearby with unsheltered picnic tables and barbecues, although wheelchair users may require assistance with the path leading to the area
Edited sentence: A local bus service runs up and down the mountain every 30 minutes during the day, weekdays.The Mount Nelson Pharmacy, which serves the growning number of elderly and retired residents.The Mount Nelson Tavern serves meals and also doubles as a wonderful place for the local residents to meet and enjoy a beer over a game of pool.The main road in Mount Neslon is Nelson Road, which extends up the mountain from the Wrest Point Hotel Casino in the suburb of Sandy Bay.There is a picnic area nearby with unsheltered picnic tables and BBQs, although wheelchair users may require assistance with the path leading to the area