Original sentence: A 2008 study by Dalhousie University's School for Resource and Environmental Studies concluded that, in Atlantic Canada, mink farming is a “non-controlled industry” which uses local land fills to dispose of dead animals.Domestic mink are larger than wild mink which may cause problems with the ecosystem when they escape.If fur farming were eliminated, the price of fur might increase.Most of the released and wild mink in the area die slow deaths, due to starvation, or from injuries from the unnaturally high number of mink fighting for a territory.Others argue that fur farming is a necessary evil, because it allegedly protects wild fur bearers from over harvest.The study also reported that some mink farms keep uncovered piles of manure, use improper cages and are too close to neighbours
Edited sentence: Domestic mink have one advantage over their wild counterparts.If  fur farming were eliminated, the price of fur would increase.Most of the released and wild mink in the area die slow, painful deaths, caused by starvation, or from injuries from the unnaturally high number of mink fighting for a territory.Others argue that fur farming is a necessary evil, because it protects wild fur bearers from over harvest.They are larger than wild mink which may cause problems with the ecosystem when they escape