Original sentence: He caused sensation in 1910 in which he published "Egypt's Ruin", a careful analysis about Egypt's systematic exploitation through Brits after the occupation, proved by using correspondent reports of London newspapers over Egypt and British government documents.Hey remained in Russia, became a member of the Communist Party of the Soviet Union, took on the chairmanship of the "University reform commission" (1920-1921), became the Ambassador to Tehran (1921-1922) and was from 1922 on a member of the "Collegium of the People's Commissariat for Foreign Affairs"
Edited sentence: He caused sensation in 1910 in which he published "Egypt's Ruin", a careful analysis about Egypt's systematic exploitation by the British after the occupation, proved by using correspondent reports of London newspapers over Egypt and British government documents.He remained in Russia, became a member of the Communist Party of the Soviet Union, took on the chairmanship of the "University reform commission" (1920-1921), became the Ambassador to Tehran (1921-1922) and was from 1922 on a member of the "Collegium of the People's Commissariat for Foreign Affairs"