Original sentence: Those who dislike Ginny argue that she is poorly written to the point of being a Mary Sue, played up as the beautiful, popular, and athletically gifted female with great magical talent while her flaws are supposedly deliberately glossed over by the author
Edited sentence: Those who dislike Ginny argue that she is poorly written to the point of being a Mary Sue, played up as the beautiful, popular, and athletically gifted female with great magical talent while her many and unsympathetic flaws are supposedly deliberately glossed over by the author