Original sentence: Critics who take note of this art form have been positive about his work.Dash Shaw (born April 6 1983) is the author and artist of the graphic novels Love Eats Brains published by Odd God Press, GardenHead published by Meathaus, and The Mother's Mouth published by Alternative Comics.Dash Shaw was born April 6 1983 in Hollywood, California, then moved with his family to Richmond, Virginia in 1985.Shaw graduated from the School of Visual Arts in Manhattan in 2005, with a major in comics/illustration.Shaw is well along on a 720-page graphic novel, with publication anticipated in 2007
Edited sentence: Critics who take note of this sadly still-marginalized art form have been overwhelmingly positive about his work.Dash Shaw (April 6, 1983- ) is the author and artist of the graphic novels Love Eats Brains, published by Odd God Press, GardenHead published by Meathaus, and The Mother's Mouth by Alternative Comics.Dash graduated from the School of Visual Arts in Manhattan in 2005, with a major in comics/illustration.Dash maintains a web site on his comic and illustration efforts.Dash was born April 6, 1983, in Hollywood, California, then moved with his family to Richmond, Virginia, in 1985.com]  He is well along on a 720-page graphic novel, with publication anticipated in 2007