Original sentence: It has been noted that there is an absence of these birds in the Hawaiian islands.Kneten has recently published a book describing a multitude of ways to eliminate the world of these creatures.The grackle, known scientifically as Ave Ratonus, or "Rat Bird", is a gregarious bird that is known for its stare and voracious appetite for corn chips
Edited sentence: It has been noted that there is a disturbing absence of these wonderful birds in the Hawaiian islands, leading many to doubt the islands' claim to being a paradise.Kneten has recently published a book describing a multitude of ways to eliminate the world of these adorable creatures.The grackle, known scientifically as Ave Ratonus, or "Rat Bird", is a gregarious bird that is known for its evil stare and voracious appetite for corn chips