Original sentence: During the 2010–11 season, Gilroy's club, Dungannon RFC, came fifth but made a big improvement in 2011-12 season with Dungannon with their team just missing out with the title but won third place.During the Ireland Six nations campaign in 2012, Gilroy was called up to train with the six additional youngsters along side Fionn Carr, Jack McGrath, Ian Nagle, Peter O'Mahony and Tiernan O'Halloran.Gilroy again scored twice the next game against Benetton Treviso when Ulster rugby won 19–9.Gilroy scored his first try of the 2010–11 season against the Cardiff Blues where he scored two tries in which Ulster won 37–15 and burst onto the scene.Gilroy was also nominated for Young Player of the Year but that award went to Munster back row Peter O’Mahony.He played also in Ulster Rugbys 2012 Heineken Cup final 42–14 loss to Leinster Rugby.He then made his tally to 5 tries when he scored against Leinster rugby but it was not good enough and Leinster won 30–13
Edited sentence: During the 2010-11 season Gilroy's club,Dungannon RFC came fifth but made a big improvement in 2011-12 season with Dungannon with there team just missing out with the title but won third place.During the Ireland Six nations campaign in 2012 Gilroy was called up to train with the 6 additional youngsters along side Fionn Carr, Jack McGrath, Ian Nagle, Peter O'Mahony and Tiernan O'Halloran.Gilroy again scored twice the next game against Benetton Treviso when Ulster rugby won 19-9.Gilroy scored his first try of the 2010-11 season against the Cardiff Blues were he scored two tries in which Ulster won 37-15 and burst onto the scene.Gilroy was also nominated for Young Player of the Year but that award went to impressive Munster back row Peter O’Mahony.He played also in Ulster Rugbys 2012 Heineken Cup final 42-14 loss to Leinster Rugby.He then made his tally to 5 tries when he scored against Leinster rugby but it was not good enough and Leinster won 30-13