Original sentence: Shortly before the battle, the Japanese warship the Yamato was sunk by American air power on her trip to Okinawa.Sturgeon at a loss of about 5,600 nine months before the land campaign; these Japanese deaths (the Sturgeon escaped despite being pummeled by depth charges) are usually not even figured in battle losses.The American land campaign was controlled by the 10th Army, commanded by Lieutenant General Simon Bolivar Buckner, Jr.The island fell on about June 21, though some Japanese continued fighting, including the future governor of Okinawa prefecture, Masahide Ota
Edited sentence: A work in progress — at least one writer hopes to fill in more later...And hardly anyone in America knows it exists, or anything else about Okinawa.Everybody's heard of Iwo Jima, an eight square mile dot where nearly seven thousand Americans and twenty-one thousand Japanese died.For truly detailed information on the south and detailed discussions of bloodbaths like Sugar Loaf Hill, one must consult deeper references.It was never even a major base.Okinawa could have swallowed the island and the battle.Okinawa was to become an unsinkable aircraft carrier.Shortly before the battle, the Japanese warship the  Yamato, the mightiest warship ever built, was sunk by American air power on her trip to Okinawa.Sturgeon at a loss of about 5,600 nine months before tha land campaign; these Japanese deaths (the Sturgeon escaped despite being pummeled by depth charges) are usually not even figured in battle losses.The American land campaign was controlled by 10th Army, commanded by Lieutenant General Simon Bolivar Buckner, Jr.The battle has landed in a strange black hole, as far as the  United States in concerned.The history is unpleasant.The horrific carnage often draws blank stares from Americans.The island fell on about June 21, though some Japanese continued fighting, including the future governer of Okinawa prefecture, Masahide Ota.The natural beauty is spectacular; this writer has been there.The war was over (or nearly over at the outset) in Europe; the end in Japan was in sight, and American's were returning to peacetime pursuits;  president Franklin Delano Roosevelt died on April 12, the end of an era.There is an area in southern Okinawa called Suicide Cliffs.There was competent leadership on both sides; in particular the tricky Japanese leadship greatly increased the carnage