Original sentence: In his audition, which took place at the Manchester auditions on 24 March 2007, and was televised on 9 June 2007,  he performed a stand-up comedy routine and at the end sang a part of the song Life is a Cabaret by Liza Minnelli
Edited sentence: In his audition, which took place at the Manchester auditions in March 2007, and was televised on 9 June 2007,  he performed a stand-up comedy routine and at the end sang a part of the song Life is a Cabaret by Liza Minnelli