Original sentence: The family moved several times during Edwards' childhood, eventually settling in Robbins, North Carolina, where his father worked as a textile mill floor worker, eventually promoted to supervisor; his mother had a roadside antique finishing  business and then worked as a postal letter carrier when his father left his job
Edited sentence: The family moved several times during Edwards' childhood, eventually settling in Robbins, North Carolina, where his father worked as a textile mill floor worker, was quickly promoted to management and later was a consultant to the industry; his mother had a roadside antique finishing  business and then worked as a postal letter carrier when his father left his job