Original sentence: Foden commented "Mark had written the treatment and the general idea was that Michael and Janet were on this large spacecraft.Ghosts was named the longest music video ever by the record book, while Thriller later collected a world record for being the most successful music video of all time.Videos released in this period also continued the use of group choreography ("Bad", directed by Martin Scorsese, and "Smooth Criminal") and a female love interest ("The Way You Make Me Feel").When Walter Yetnikoff, the president of Jackson's record label, CBS, approached MTV chiefs to play the "Billie Jean" video in the early 1980s, they initially refused; they felt black music wasn't "rock" enough
Edited sentence: Foden commented, "Mark had written the treatment and the general idea was that Michael and Janet were on this large spacecraft.Ghosts was named the longest music video ever by the record book, and Thriller later collected a world record for being the most successful music video of all time.Videos released in this period continued the use of group choreography ("Bad", directed by Martin Scorsese, and "Smooth Criminal") and a female love interest ("The Way You Make Me Feel").When Walter Yetnikoff, the president of Jackson's record label, CBS, approached MTV chiefs to play the "Billie Jean" video in the early 1980s, they initially refused, feeling that black music wasn't "rock" enough