Original sentence: Despite the band's obvious efforts to create a recording more appealing to mainstream media, thus attracting new fans, Holidays In Eden could not compete regarding sales or chart positions with the band's first four studio albums from the 1980s.Holidays In Eden was the sixth studio album by the British band Marillion, released in 1991.It was recorded after the Seasons End tour which had lasted almost a year.It was their second with vocalist Steve Hogarth and was regarded by many fans as a setback from their previous albums due to its mainstream-oriented sound and songwriting
Edited sentence: Holidays In Eden, a music album by the British band Marillion released in 1991, is widely regarded by the fans as a setback from their previous albums due to its high "poppy" factor.It is more of a pop album than most of the latter albums, as well.It was recorded after the Seasons End Tour which had lasted almost a year.It wasn't a hit despite containing many shorter songs that could have been hits, had the promotion from EMI not started to wane.That it was less popular than previous recordings was evident in the album charts.The most notable songs on this record includes Splintering Heart, Cover My Eyes (Pain And Heaven), Waiting To Happen and The Rakes Progress Trilogy (This Town, The Rakes Progress and 100 Nights)