Original sentence: Because of his Sports Illustrated appearance, some speculate that he was another victim of the Sports Illustrated Cover Jinx.In the 1976 Olympics the following summer, he could manage only a Silver medal in the 400m freestyle; he was completely shut out of his signature event, the 1500m freestyle.Shaw further was a member of the 1984 US water polo team that was undefeated in Olympic competition but was awarded the Silver Medal because the Yugoslav team, with an identical record, scored four more goals overall
Edited sentence: Because of that, he was one of the best swimmers never to win an Olympic Gold medal.Furthermore, he was a member of the 1984 US water polo team that was undefeated in Olympic competition but was awarded the Silver Medal because the Yugoslav team, with an identical record, scored four more goals overall.Perhaps Tim Shaw was a victim of the Sports Illustrated Cover Jinx, but in the 1976 Olympics the following summer, he could manage only a Silver medal in the 400m freestyle; he was completely shut out of his signature event, the 1500m freestyle