Original sentence: Bennie convinces Elita to go on a road trip with him to visit Garcia's grave, claiming initially that he only wants proof that Garcia is in fact dead and no longer a threat to his relationship with her.Bennie tries to psych out the other biker while trying to build up his own nerve.Bennie, who has never been faced with such a situation, is unsure how to react.He confesses to Elita his plan to decapitate Garcia's corpse and effectively sell it for money.He succeeds in getting his hands on an iron skillet and knocks the man unconscious.He takes the gun, finds the other biker kissing Elita and shoots him to death.Still shaken from the attack by the bikers, she begs Bennie to give up his quest and return with her to Mexico City, where they can be married and live a life of relative peace.They initially agree, and one takes Elita into a nearby field, where he accosts her.When the other biker wakes up, Bennie kills him, too
Edited sentence: Bennie builds up his nerve.Bennie convinces Elita to go on a road trip with him to visit Garcia's grave, claiming initially that he only wants proof that Garcia is in fact dead and no longer a threat to their relationship.Bennie seems unsure how to react.He confesses to Elita his plan to decapitate Garcia's corpse and sell it for money.He gets his hands on an iron skillet and knocks the first biker unconscious.He takes the gun, finds the other biker ravaging Elita and shoots him.Still shaken from the attack by the bikers, she begs Bennie to give up this quest and return to Mexico City, where they can be married and live a life of relative peace.They initially agree and one takes Elita to a nearby field, where he accosts her.When the first biker wakes up, Bennie kills him, too