Original sentence: He grew up a Vikings fan despite not focusing on football as his main sport until college.He was Mr.Hoag Re-signed to the Redskins’ practice squad on December 27, 2006 and was commissioned to the Berlin Thunder of the now defunct NFL Europa league where his playing opportunities were scarce.Hoag has a brother Brad - also known as "The Brad".Hoag is a native of Minneapolis, and attended Washburn High.Hoag is one of 25 bachelors vying to win the love of bachelorette DeAnna Pappas.Hoag lettered in football, track, soccer, and tennis at and was twice named all-conference and team captain in tennis, as well as an All-conference honoree in soccer.In a situation where first impressions are everything, Hoag was most notable for not sharing the blanket with the shivering bachelorette on the first night they met.In the summer of 2008, Hoag appears on ABC's primetime show The Bachelorette.Irrelevant on ESPN during the 2004 draft coverage, passing the Mr.Peter, MN
Edited sentence: He also is an avid boy toucher in his free time.He also was the 2004 Mr.He enjoys bragging about his little fame earning him little or no respect.Hoag Re-signed to the Redskins’ practice squad on December 27, 2006 and was commissioned to the now-defunct NFL Europa league and the Berlin Thunder where his playing opportunities were scarce.Hoag lettered in football, track, soccer, and tennis at Washburn High in Minneapolis and was twice named all-conference and team captain in tennis, as well as an All-conference honoree in soccer.Hoag will be one of 25 bachelors vying to win the love of bachelorette DeAnna Pappas.In the summer of 2008, Hoag will appear on ABC's primetime show The Bachelorette.Irrelevant pick on ESPN during draft coverage, passing the Mr.More notably, he is a contestant on the 2008 TV series Bachelorette and known for refusing to share his blanket with the shivering bachelorette on the first night they met.Peter, MN and Washburn High in Minneapolis.Ryan has a brother Brad - also known as "The Brad".Ryan is a native of Minneapolis.Ryan is now a dean at Washburn High in South Minneapolis being so egotistical gets him into alot of trouble with the student body.who grew up a Vikings fan despite not focusing on football as his main sport until college