Original sentence: According to the 1959 Purdue University yearbook, his hometown was Huntington, Indiana and he was a member of the engineering societies Pi Tau Sigma, Tau Beta Pi, and the American Society of Mechanical Engineers.Richard Leroy Walters (1931 - August 19, 2007) was a jet propulsion engineer who died homeless in Phoenix, Arizona and left a bequest of $4 million to charities including National Public Radio and the Mission of Mercy, in Phoenix
Edited sentence: According to the 1959 Purdue University yearbook, his hometown was Huntington, Indiana and he was a member of the honorary engineering societies Pi Tau Sigma, Tau Beta Pi, and the American Society of Mechanical Engineers.Richard Leroy Walters ((May 3, 1931 - August 19, 2007) was a jet propulsion engineer who died homeless in Phoenix, Arizona and left a bequest of $4 million to charities including National Public Radio and the Mission of Mercy, in Phoenix