Original sentence: On 9 May, Count Galeazzo Ciano, Mussolini's Foreign Minister and son-in-law, arrived for a surprise visit to Italian troops and he wrote in his diary:
Edited sentence: On 9 May, Count Galeazzo Ciano, Mussolini's Foreign Minister and son-in-law, arrived for a surprise visit to Italian troops that had tied down Greek forcesand he wrote in his diary: