Original sentence: During Sisko's concluding captains log – which foreshadows the imminent Dominion War – the camera cuts to various scenes of the crew benefiting from Jake and Nog's recent work: O'Brien leaving the holodeck after running the rapids, Bashir sitting near his stuffed bear, Kira delivering an effective speech, Worf enjoying Klingon opera, even Weyoun and Giger discussing immortality, and, finally, Captain Sisko hugging his son upon receipt of the card
Edited sentence: During Sisko's concluding captains log – which foreshadows the imminent Dominion War – the camera cuts to various scenes of the crew benefiting from Jake and Nog's recent work: O'Brien leaving the holodeck after running the rapids, Bashir sitting near his stuffed bear, Kira delivering an effective speech, Worf enjoying Klingon opera, even Weyoun using Giger's  immortality machine under his supervision, and, finally, Captain Sisko hugging his son upon receipt of the card