Original sentence: By 1984, he had recruited his older brother Arthur and his son Michael.Whitworth, who would go on to become a Navy senior chief radioman, agreed to assist Walker in accessing highly-classified communications data in 1973
Edited sentence: By 1984, he had recruited his older brother Arthur, a retired ex-enlisted [[Lieutenant Commander] and his son Michael, an active duty Petty Officer.Whitworth, who would go on to become a Navy Senior Chief Petty Officer / Senior Chief Radioman, agreed to assist Walker in accessing highly-classified communications data in 1973