Original sentence: The advert was removed soon after, following extensive, and predominantly negative, coverage.. As well as discussion surrounding the increase in load times, there has been consternation about advertising being retrospectively added into a game that had already been paid for
Edited sentence: The advert was removed soon afterwards following extensive, and predominantly negative, coverage.. As well as discussion surrounding the increase in load times, there has been consternation about advertising being retrospectively added into a game that had already been paid for