Original sentence: In a review in Foreign Affairs, Georgetown University Professor of Government, Charles King, an expert on nationalism, criticized the book, arguing that Lowry's definition of a nation is vague, ahistorical and contradictory, "few of Lowry's statements would pass muster with historians", and Lowry's assertions about the unity, homogeneity and fixity of units such as Ancient Egypt, Korea, Japan and China "should be an embarrassment" to "any serious thinker
Edited sentence: In a review in Foreign Affairs, Georgetown University Professor of Government, Charles King, an expert on nationalism, criticized the book, noting that Lowry's definition of a nation is vague, ahistorical and contradictory, "few of Lowry's statements would pass muster with historians", and Lowry's sweeping assertions about the unity, homogeneity and fixidity of units such as Ancient Egypt, Korea, Japan and China "should be an embarrassment" to "any serious thinker