Original sentence: Drayton fell in love with Goodere's daughter, and this may have inspired some of his love poetry.Drayton was also a contemporary of John Donne though it is not known if Drayton and Donne ever knew each other.Drayton, however, approaches the very first poets of the Elizabethan era in his charming Nimphidia, a poem which inspired Robert Herrick with his sweet fairy fancies and stands alone of its kind in English literature; while some of his odes and lyrics are inspired by noble feeling and virile imagination.For several years Drayton was esquire to Sir Walter Aston.For this, according to literary scholars, his ponderous style is much to blame.His historical poems, which he was constantly rewriting and improving, are believed by many to be much more interesting, and often rise to a true poetic eloquence.It is notable for a version of the Song of Solomon, executed with considerable richness of expression.Most literary scholars believe that his pastorals are brilliant, but overladen with colour and sweet to insipidity
Edited sentence: Drayton, however, approaches the very first poets of the Elizabethan era in his charming Nimphidia, a poem which inspired Herrick with his sweet fairy fancies and stands alone of its kind in English literature; while some of his odes and lyrics are inspired by noble feeling and virile imagination.For several years he was esquire to Sir Walter Aston.For this his ponderous style is much to blame.His historical poems, which he was constantly rewriting and improving, are much more interesting, and often rise to a true poetic eloquence.His pastorals are brilliant, but overladen with colour and sweet to insipidity.The It is notable for a version of the Song of Solomon, executed with considerable richness of expression