Original sentence: In 2007 the fledgling LJMU Darts Team defeated their local rivals Liverpool University 7-5 in a win which brought home the Varsity Championship trophy.LJMU hosts guest lectures, with past speakers including His Holiness the Dalai Lama, Steven Spielberg, Willy Russell, Phil Redmond, Alastair Campbell, and Baroness Shirley Williams of Crosby.The Union publishes a magazine called Havoc and operates a radio station called Shout FM.The University has links with industry, with degree programmes having been developed in association with leading companies including Ford, IBM, Lucas Industries plc and Jaguar.This completed a treble victory after they lifted the SRL National League and SRL Premiership
Edited sentence: In 2007 the fledgling LJMU Darts Team trounced their local rivals Liverpool University 7-5 in an epic battle of will which resulted in LJMUDT bringing home the Varsity Championship trophy, as well as the knowledge that they are the superior higher education establishment representative darts team on Merseyside.LJMU has significant industrial links, with degree programmes have been developed with leading companies including Ford, IBM, Lucas industries and Jaguar.LJMU often hosts guest lectures, with past speakers including His Holiness the Dalai Lama, Steven Spielberg, Willy Russell, Phil Redmond, Alastair Campbell, and Baroness Shirley Williams of Crosby.This completed a famous treble after they lifted the SRL National League and SRL Premiership.This has a magazine called Havoc and a radio station called Shout FM