Original sentence: " The IDF concedes that fewer than 4 percent of women are in combat positions.As of 2010, 88% of all roles in the IDF are open to female candidates.and women could be found in 69% of all IDF positions
Edited sentence: " The IDF admits that fewer than 4 percent of women are in combat positions.As of 2010 women could be found in only 69% of all IDF positions.Women in the IDF have faced discrimination by religious soldiers and by military authorities