Original sentence: Thirteen-year-old Paul Fisher, who plays soccer despite mysterious sight problems believed to have been caused by viewing an eclipse for too long, has recently moved to Florida from Houston, Texas, after his father takes a job in civil engineering
Edited sentence: Twelve-year-old Paul Fisher, who plays soccer despite mysterious sight problems believed to have been caused by viewing an eclipse for too long, has recently moved to Florida from Houston, Texas, after his father takes a job in civil engineering