Original sentence: " Simon hands the bouncer a credit card - the same one belonging to Todd - and he and Marcus then enter the back room, where they each receive a lap dance.However, Simon does precisely that, and he heads to a back room with two ladies and Marcus in tow.Marcus, who chose to wear a yellow sport coat, had been treated like a hotel staff member while Simon was off, even being given a dollar after a customer mistook him for a bathroom attendant.Simon and Marcus rush into their room and roust up the sickly Tiny and Singh, telling them they have 30 seconds to get out of there
Edited sentence: " Simon hands the bouncer a credit card - the same one belonging to Todd - and he and Marcus then enter the back room, where they each receive a sensual lap dance.Because of his unfortunate decision to wear a yellow sport coat, Marcus had been treated like a hotel staff member while Simon was off, even being given a dollar after a customer mistook him for a bathroom attendant.Simon and Marcus rush into their room and roust up a sickly Tiny and Singh, telling them they have 30 seconds to get out of there.Unfortunately, Simon does precisely that, and he heads to a back room with two ladies and Marcus in tow