Original sentence: Bowes had underwent several operations and to this day, she continues to recover from the accident.By late 1958, Bowes had already won the Pet Milk's nationwide talent competition.The singles gained some attention, but failed to chart and as a result failed to gain any success for Bowes or her record company, Hickory
Edited sentence: By late 1958, Margie Bowes had already won the Pet Milk's nationwide talent competition.Margie Bowes' career was not over yet.Margie had underwent several operations and to this day, she continues to recover from the accident.The singles gained some attention, but failed to chart and as a result failed to gain any success for Margie Bowes or her record company, Hickory