Original sentence: It is considered to be one of Brisbane's poorer suburbs and crime rates are higher.It is known for its great drag strip on Wynnum-Manly road and there have been fatalities due to these illegal races.Tingalpa (Tin-gal-pa) is located nearby Belmont and Carina in Brisbane's East.Tingalpa has many facilities including a pony club, sports fields and numerous creeks and rivers
Edited sentence: It is considered to be one of Brisbanes poorer suburbs and therefore crime rates are higher.It is known for its great drag strip on Wynnum-Manly road and there have been fatalities taken due to these illegal races.Tingalpa (Tin-gal-pa) is located nearby Belmont and Carina in Brisbanes East.Tingalpa has many Facilities including a pony club, Sports fields and numerous creeks and rivers