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Edited sentence: After murdering him, she catches a witch and tortures her, causing her to reveal not only Will and Lyra's location and their protectors, but that Lyra is fated to be the second Eve.Coulter states her intention to destroy Lyra rather than risk a second Fall.Coulter tricks Sir Charles into revealing the secret of the knife.Scoresby dies while holding off the soldiers, giving Grumman a chance to escape.They set off in Scoresby's hot-air balloon and Grumman explains that the Subtle Knife is also how the Spectres came into the world.Will, unable to sleep one night, wanders up a mountain and finds Grumman, who staunches the bleeding in his hand and instructs him to take the knife to Lord Asriel, as it is the tool Asriel needs to win the great war that he is preparing against The Authority