Original sentence: In september 2008, Mark Fangen-Hall was appointed as the Head Coach for Queen's Rowing on a 2 year contract.The first day was succesful for intermediate sculler William Howell who comfortable won his heat and semi-final before just about breaking sweat in the final
Edited sentence: In September 2008, Mark Fangen-Hall was appointed as the Head Coach for Queen's Rowing on a 2 year contract.The first day was successful for intermediate sculler William Howell who comfortable won his heat and semi-final before just about breaking sweat in the final