Original sentence: Pastor Brian Tamaki is a controversial but charismatic leader of The Destiny Church, a Christian movement which has become well known in New Zealand it is controversial not only for its anti-gay views, but also for taking 10% of the income of all its members and for it stands against for what they belive to be a decline of Christian moral & family values in the nation.Tamaki also gave rise to a [right-wing]] conservative political party, Destiny New Zealand, which he says will be in control of the New Zealand government in the next five years.Tamaki preaches a conservative biblical morality, he is widely known for his outspoken anti-gay views.and his opposition to the Civil Union Bill, which gives the right to gay and lesbian couples to join in a civil union, for this he has been criticised extensively by gay activists
Edited sentence: Destiny Church also gave rise to the conservative political party, Destiny New Zealand, which Tamaki says will be in control of the New Zealand government in the next five years.Pastor Brian Tamaki is the  charismatic leader and founder of Destiny Church, a Christian movement which has become well known in New Zealand for its stand against the decline of Christian moral & family values in the nation.Tamaki preaches a conservative biblical morality, and has been harshly criticised by gay activists for his views against homosexual behaviour, and his opposition to the Civil Union Bill, which gives the right to homosexual couples to join in a civil union