Original sentence: Shortly after the film was "green-lit" by 20th Century Fox, it was announced in October, 2008, that writer Allan Loeb, whom's notable work as a writer includes Things We Lost in the Fire,  21, and created the television show New Amsterdam, had been "tapped" to write the script in what is was being described as being a page one rewrite
Edited sentence: Shortly after the film was "green-lit" by 20th Century Fox, it was announced in October, 2008, that writer Allan Loeb, whom's notable work as a writer includes Things We Lost in the Fire,  21, and created the television show New Amsterdam, had been "tapped" to write the script in what is was being described as being a "page one rewrite"