Original sentence: D'souza doesn't like her.Mandal sir, Zenia, Ritu, Vir and Zee are her big fans but Ms.She is doesn't like her cousin sister Guddi because she borrows her clothes without permission.She is famous as the school crybaby and everybody closes his/her ears when she starts crying.She likes Ragini too but becomes jealous of her sweet voice and when she became Mandal sir's favourite because of scoring the highest marks in the hindi test.she likes jango and think that he is puppy dog cute
Edited sentence: D'souza doesn't like her because she thinks that she is a B-Grade third actress who doesn't know anything about acting.Later she hated him due to the reason that he is keep on following her and wasn't able to concentrate on her lecturers and didn't leave her for a single minute also.Mandal sir, Zenia, Ritu, Vir and Zee are her big fans.She is doesn't like her cousin sister Guddi because she borrows her clothes without her permission.She is famous as the school crybaby and everybody closes their ears when she starts crying.She likes Jango and think that he is puppy dog cute.She likes Ragini too but becomes jealous of her sweet voice when she sings with Vir and when she became Mandal sir's favourite because of scoring the highest marks in the hindi test.and if she dosen'tgo to her home before 7 p.she will not be able to see her favourite cartoon programs for a week