Original sentence: "   He is disgusted and horrified by this animal and crushes it with his foot.After exiting the train at the same time, he strives to come up with something to say to this woman, but he sees the chain linked to one of the "pets" he despises and immediately lets her walk away.He wasn't sure what her reaction would be so he waited to call her in the afernoon (as he normally does).Immediately he feels guilty and his first instinct is to call his wife Jenny.Once home, he finds that Jenny brought one of the  "creatures" with her.One evening while on his way home from work, he notices a woman sitting across from him with a gold chain that brings back memories of something.She was unable to take his call and didn't return the call either.So Stuart called again, only to find that she left work early
Edited sentence: "   Disgusted and horrified by the appearance of this animal, he crushes it with his foot.After exiting the train at the same stop as the woman, he strives to come up with something to say, but he sees the chain linked to one of the "pets" he despises and immediately lets her walk away.Immediately he's remorseful and his first instinct is to call his wife Jenny.Once home, he finds that Jenny brought one of the "creatures" with her.One evening while on his way home from work, he notices a woman sitting across from him with a gold chain that brings back memories.She wasn't able to take his call and didn't return the call either.Since he wasn't sure what her reaction would be, he waited to call her at the normal time in the afernoon.Stuart called again, only to find that she left work early