Original sentence: Bush  2001–  Republican  21  Foreign policy of pre-emption, September 11, 2001 attacks, War on Terrorism, Department of Homeland Security, 2001 war in Afghanistan, PATRIOT Act which drew criticism for Civil Rights violations, Iraq War, capture of Saddam Hussein, Guantanamo Bay detainment camp, No Child Left Behind, tax cuts, Medicare prescription drug benefit, largest ever federal budget deficits, Marriage Protection Act, Hurricane Katrina, withdrawal from the Anti-Ballistic Missile Treaty, expansion of executive power (unitary executive theory), NSA warrantless surveillance, Military Commissions Act of 2006, Vision for Space Exploration, opposition to the Kyoto Protocol, Plame affair,  nonintervention in Darfur conflict, foiled numerous potential terrorist attacks   Newsday
Edited sentence: Bush  2001–  Republican  21  Foreign policy of pre-emption, September 11, 2001 attacks, War on Terrorism, Department of Homeland Security, 2001 war in Afghanistan, PATRIOT Act which drew criticism for Civil Rights violations, Iraq War quagmire, capture of Saddam Hussein, Guantanamo Bay detainment camp, No Child Left Behind, tax cuts, Medicare prescription drug benefit, largest ever federal budget deficits, Marriage Protection Act, Hurricane Katrina, withdrawal from the Anti-Ballistic Missile Treaty, expansion of executive power (unitary executive theory), NSA warrantless surveillance, Military Commissions Act of 2006, Vision for Space Exploration, opposition to the Kyoto Protocol, Plame affair,  nonintervention in Darfur conflict, foiled numerous potential terrorist attacks   Newsday