Original sentence: Climatic factors and resistance to collectivization also created a large-scale famine in the Soviet Union in which millions died.Soviet officials also believed that collectivization would increase crop yields and help fund other programs, but it didn't result exactly how they hoped.These famines were among the worst in history and created scars which would mark the Soviet Union for many years to come, despite disagreements about to what degree it was to blame
Edited sentence: Secondly, the collectivization created a large-scale famine in the Soviet Union in which millions died.Soviet officials also believed that collectivization would increase crop yields and help fund other programs.These famines were among the worst in history and created scars which would mark the Soviet Union for many years to come.This agricultural collectivization was however a failure for the Soviets