Original sentence: Following her service in Iraq, Fournier was promoted despite the violations of journalistic ethics and the mixing of government propaganda and personal opinion while using government equipment.Individuals had to resort to Freedom of Information Act requests in order to get the truth about this "Grandma in Iraq" and the ultimate disclosure resulted in great embarrassment
Edited sentence: Army Corps of Engineers to promote someone who attempted to deceive the American public is astounding.Following her service in Iraq, Fournier was promoted despite the flagrant violations of journalistic ethics and the mixing of government propaganda and personal opinion while using government equipment.Individuals had to resort to Freedom of Information Act requests in order to get the truth about this "Grandma in Iraq" and the ultimate disclosure resulted in great embarrassment and another lapse of judgment for an organization still feeling the effects of poor judgment in New Orleans.The lack of judgment on the part of the U