Original sentence: Born Julia Carolyn McWilliams to John and Julia Carolyn ("Caro") McWilliams in Pasadena, California, Julia grew up eating traditional New England food prepared by the family maid.She attended Polytechnic School from fourth grade to ninth grade and then The Branson School in Ross, California
Edited sentence: Born Julia Carolyn McWilliams to John and Julia Carolyn ("Caro") McWilliams in Pasadena, California, Julia grew up eating traditional New England food prepared by the family maid; she attended Polytechnic School from fourth grade to ninth grade and then The Branson School in Ross, California