Original sentence: Despite having competent subordinates, including Captain Carrot and Sergeants Angua and Detritus, Vimes finds it difficult to delegate, and is frustrated by the fact that the growth of the Watch has left him with less and less time for actual policing.In the course of his mission to Überwald as ambassador, he was disgusted to learn that he was also entitled to be addressed as "His Excellency".Vimes' involvement in preventing a pointless war with Klatch in the novel Jingo led to his being once more "rewarded" with an unwanted title, in this case "Duke of Ankh"
Edited sentence: Despite having extremely competent subordinates, including Captain Carrot and Sergeants Angua and Detritus, Vimes finds it difficult to delegate watch tasks, and is frustrated by the fact that the growth of the watch has left him with less and less time for actual street coppering.He sees the title primarily as a job description.His role as Commander largely involves (to the dismay of his wife) the chasing of criminals on important dates in his social life, including his wedding.In some ways he found it a relief when, in Night Watch, he was transported back to the Ankh-Morpork of his youth, and became a sergeant-at-arms in the inefficient, paperwork-free and moderately corrupt Watch of that time.In the course of his mission to Überwald as Ambassador, he was disgusted to learn that he was also entitled to be addressed as "His Excellency".Vimes's involvement in preventing a pointless war with Klatch in the novel Jingo led to his being once more "rewarded" with an unwanted title, in this case "Duke of Ankh".While this may have impressed the ruling cliques in Überwald, it did not impress him