Original sentence: Offering a scenic view of Bushnell Park, the Park River and the state Capitol building, the room attracted a wealthy clientele and some of the biggest musical performers of the day including Count Basie, Ella Fitzgerald, Cole Porter, Frank Sinatra, Eugene Ormandy, Nat "King" Cole, and Rosemary Clooney
Edited sentence: Offering a breathtaking view of Bushnell Park, the Park River and the state Capitol building, the room attracted a wealthy clientele and some of the biggest musical performers of the day including Count Basie, Ella Fitzgerald, Cole Porter, Frank Sinatra, Eugene Ormandy, Nat "King" Cole, and Rosemary Clooney