Original sentence: He used his position and influence to demand relief of the siege even before the Boers had completely encircled the city.Rhodes had his own agenda, which differed from the greater war goal of redressing wrongs in the Transvaal
Edited sentence: He used his position and influence to demand relief of the siege vociferously in both the press and directly of the government.Rhodes had his own agenda, which differed from the greater war goal of redressing wrongs in the Transvaal that had triggered the conflict