Original sentence: Leo, in his mid-sixties, is looking through his old things.The greater portion of the text concerns itself with Leo's past, particularly the summer of 1900, spent in Norfolk as a guest at Brandham Hall, the country home of his schoolfriend Marcus Maudsley.The story begins with the reminiscences of Leo Colston, an elderly man looking back on his childhood with nostalgia.This leaves him greatly admired by the other boys, who think that he is a magician—something that he comes to half-believe himself
Edited sentence: The greater portion of the text concerns itself with Leo's past, particularly the summer of 1900, spent in Norfolk as a guest at Brandham Hall, the luxurious country home of his schoolfriend Marcus Maudsley.The importance of his boarding school's social rules is another theme.The older Leo, who narrates the book is nothing like the vivacious, courageous Leo in the story.The prologue begins with an older Leo (in his mid-sixties), looking through his old things.The story begins with the reminiscences of Leo Colston, an elderly man looking back on his childhood with nostalgia, a theme found in abundance throughout the novel.This leaves him greatly admired by the other boys, who think that he is a magician -- something that he comes to half-believe himself