Original sentence: Critics claim that McDonalds destroys many aspects of a country's culture and promotes obesity.McWorld is a term sometimes used to describe the spreading of McDonalds restaurants throughout the world, as the result of globalization, and more generally to the effects of globalization as a whole
Edited sentence: Globalization of McDonalds has made the obesity epidemic more contractible around the world.McDonalds destroys many aspects of a country's culture, and promotes worldwide obesity.McWorld describes the spreading of McDonalds restaurants throughout the world, as the result of mass globalization