Original sentence: As a result, he was refocused on his oboe performance.Galliard earned an esteemed seat in the chamber music of George.He wrote the music to Clypso and Tlemachus (From Sibley Music Library Digital Scores Collection) upon the request of a friend, the poet John Hughes.His first composition formation began at age 15.However, in the scrap for kingdom wide directorial status, Galliard fell short to greats such as Handel and Bononcini.In response to war victories, Galliard composed Te Deum, Jubilate, and three additional anthems.Later, he moved to England where he would become the next chapel-master of the Somerset-House.Prince of Denmark.”  (From Sibley Music Library Digital Scores Collection)
Edited sentence: As a result, he refocused on his oboe performance.Galliard earned an esteemed seat in the chamber music of George, Prince of Denmark.He wrote the music to Clypso and Tlemachus (from Sibley Music Library Digital Scores Collection) upon the request of a friend, the poet John Hughes.His first composition instruction began at age 15.However, in the scrap for kingdom-wide directorial status, Galliard fell short to greats such as Handel and Bononcini.In response to war victories, Galliard composed a Te Deum, Jubilate, and three additional anthems.Later, he moved to England where he would become the next chapel-master of Somerset House.” (from Sibley Music Library Digital Scores Collection)