Original sentence: Despite the fact that Omri has won a large cash prize by making a short story out of his experience with bringing Little Bear to life, he has had problems in his real-life neighborhood, where skinheads are harassing and bullying Omri and Patrick.Omri is not happy at a private school his parents sent him to, but accepts because if he were to attend a public school, he would find more skinheads.Omri, Patrick and the soldiers defeat and scare the skinheads, leaving Omri free of their oppression for good as they are now too scared of him to hurt him any more
Edited sentence: Despite the fact that Omri has won a large cash prize by making a short story out of his experience with bringing Little Bear to life, he has had problems in his real life neighborhood.Omri, Patrick and the soldiers defeat and scare the Skinheads leaving Omri free of their oppression for good as they are now too scared of him to hurt him any more.Skinheads are harassing and bullying Omri and Patrick, and Omri is not happy at a private school his parents sent him to, but accepts it on account of the fact that if he were to attend a public school he would only find more skinheads.The author alludes to the serious problem of juvinielle deliquency and the skinheads which had been a nuisance in Europe in the 1970s and 1980s