Original sentence: After taking water from Ganges river of Sultanganj (the famous name here is UttarWahini Ganga),the pilgrims,bare footed travel 105 km,by this route, go to Deoghar (BABA DHAAM) to pour Gangajal on Lord Shiva (ShivLinga).Asarganj is one of the famous place in Bihar in the production of quality rice,being the people business oriented this block is getting developed fastly,people are not only involved in this traditional occupation but also getting dominant in government jobs,engineering and many other fields.Asarganj is situated at 12 KM south from the railway station,Sultanganj.Hence in the Saawan month whole Asarganj dazzles with lights and happiness.There is a very famous and a month-long festival "BOL-BUM" runs during the month of Saawan (august-september)
Edited sentence: After taking water from the Ganges river of Sultanganj (known locally as UttarWahini Ganga), the pilgrims, travel bare footed for 105 km by this route, and go to Deoghar (Baba Dhaam) to pour Gangajal on Lord Shiva (ShivLinga).As the people are business oriented, this block is quickly developing.Asarganj is one of the places in Bihar famous for the production of quality rice.Asarganj is situated at 12km south from the railway station,Sultanganj.In the Saawan month the whole of Asarganj dazzles with lights and happiness.People are not only involved in this traditional occupation but also gaining dominance in government jobs, engineering and many other fields.There is a very famous and a month-long festival "Bol-Bum" runs during the month of Saawan (august-september)