Original sentence: As the major industrial and oil-refinary port in the British mandate of Palestine, Haifa was a critical objective in the 1948 Arab-Israeli War.Haifa is a mosaic of relatively peaceful yet visibily segregated coexistence between Israeli Jews, Palestinian Arabs including Muslims and Christians, Ahmedies (Kababir), Druze, Bahai, and others.It was captured on April 23rd, 1948 by elements of the Israeli Carmeli Brigade, resulting in the flight of about 60,000 Palestinian Arabs.Today, Haifa is a thriving and diverse cultural and ethnic center, home to Jews, Arabs, Ahmedis, Bahai and Druze, and  marked for its relatively high level of coexistence
Edited sentence: As the major industrial and oil-refinary port in British-controlled Israel, Haifa was a critical objective in the 1948 Arab-Israeli War.Haifa is a mosaic of peaceful coexistance with Ahmedi arabs (Kababir), Druze, Bahai, Jews, Christians, Muslims and secular and religous beliefs all living side by side.It was liberated on April 23rd, 1948 by elements of the Israeli Carmeli Brigade, resulting in the flight of about 60,000 Arabs.Today, Haifa is a thriving and diverse cultural and ethnic center, home to Jews, Arabs, Ahmedis, Bahai and Druze, and  marked for its high level of coexistence