Original sentence: According to the IDF Palestinians constitute the majority of the population in the area Israel now controls (Israel, the Gaza Strip, and the West Bank).At war's end, Israel controlled of 78% of Mandatory Palestine, and much of the local Arab populace had either been expelled or fled.Both Clinton's and the subsequent Trump plan confine most of that majority to an area less than a quarter of the land.That year the United Nations adopted a Partition Plan, which allotted 56% of the land to 30% of the population that was Jewish.The precise number of Palestinian refugees—usually thought to lie somewhere between the contemporary Israeli figure of 500,000 and the UNRPR estimate of 910,000—many of whom settled in refugee camps in neighboring states, is a matter of dispute, but around 80 percent of the Arab inhabitants of what became Israel (half of the Arab total of Mandatory Palestine) either fled or were expelled from their homes.This was rejected by the Arab nations and hostilities broke out between the sides.When Israel declared its independence, several neighboring Arab states entered the conflict
Edited sentence: By the time hostilities had concluded, Israel was in control of 78% of Mandatory Palestine, and much of the local Arab populace was either expelled or fled.Hostilities broke out between the sides, later developing into full-scale invasion by several of the neighboring Arab states following Israel's declaration of independence.That year the United Nations adopted a Partition Plan, which allotted 56% of the land to the Jewish population, but it was rejected by the Arab nations