Original sentence: Barry Andrews (born September 12, 1956 in West Norwood, London) was once a member of the bands XTC and League of Gentlemen with Robert Fripp, and was co-founder of Shriekback.His 23 year old son, Finn Andrews, is lead singer/songwriter of London based band The Veils.His most notable solo track was "Win a Night Out with a Well-known Paranoiac", which received airplay on London's Thameside Radio and subsequently the Anne Nightingale request show on BBC Radio 1 during the mid 1980s
Edited sentence: Barry Andrews (born September 12, 1956 in West Norwood, London) was once a member of the bands XTC and League of Gentlemen with Robert Fripp, and was co-founder of the highly influential band Shriekback.His 23 year old son, Finn Andrews has also begun receiving considerable acclaim as lead singer/songwriter of London based band The Veils.His most notable solo track was "Win a Night Out with a Well-known Paranoiac", which received considerable airplay on London's Thameside Radio and subsequently the Anne Nightingale request show on BBC Radio 1 during the mid 1980s