Original sentence: In Bill's words, the HP Way is "a core ideology ... [which] includes a deep respect for the individual, a dedication to affordable quality and reliability, a commitment to community responsibility, and a view that the company exists to make technical contributions for the advancement and welfare of humanity
Edited sentence: "The HP way worked great until Bill and Dave retired and became less involved with the company.In Bill's words, the HP Way is "a core ideology.The HP Alumni Association maintains a tribute to Bill and Dave's version of the HP Way, circa 1992.The company soon became extremely "politically correct" to the point that no one could express their own opinion without being retaliated against.[that] includes a deep respect for the individual, a dedication to affordable quality and reliability, a commitment to community responsibility, and a view that the company exists to make technical contributions for the advancement and welfare of humanity