Original sentence: Israel is a liberal democracy, It is considered the most developed country in the Middle East, with the highest rating on the Human Development Index for the region.It has also been ranked higest in the region by Reporters Without Borders in terms of freedom of the press, though the organization makes a clear distinction between official Israeli territory, and Israeli-occupied territories — which it terms Israel (extra-territorial) — the latter receiving a significantly lower rating (see Reporters Without Borders article for index)
Edited sentence: Israel has one of the worst ratings on the Global Peace Index, being third from the bottom of all countries rated.Israel is a liberal democracy, although in a recent study it has also been categorized as a "flawed democracy".. It is considered the most developed country in the Middle East, with the highest rating on the Human Development Index for the region.It has also been ranked higest in the region by Reporters Without Borders in terms of freedom of the press, though many issues remain.The organization makes a clear distinction between official Israeli territory, and Israeli-occupied territories — which it terms Israel (extra-territorial) — the latter receiving a significantly lower rating (see Reporters Without Borders article for index)