Original sentence: As a rookie White challenged the lack of mental health policy in the National Basketball Association (NBA).Royce Alexander White (born April 10, 1991) is an American mixed martial artist and professional basketball player
Edited sentence: As a rookie White challenged the lack of mental health policy in the National Basketball Association (NBA) and made it much better for everyone.He has been called a great player, a hero, a role model and a wonderful human being.Royce Alexander White (born April 10, 1991) is an American mixed martial artist and professional basketball player of amazing talent.White is the best player in the world not currently in the NBA, and will likely be in the hall of fame when he retires