Original sentence: Rao had clerked for Sloviter in 2003, the year during which Sloviter's husband, medical school professor Henry Sloviter, died; Rao sold television and film rights to the novel shortly after publication
Edited sentence: Rao had clerked for Sloviter in 2003, the year during which Sloviter's husband, medical school professor Henry Sloviter, passed away; Rao sold television and film rights to the novel shortly after publication