Original sentence: (See kigo for more on the importance of sakura in Japanese poetry.As the time passes, changes take place in a person's life and the poem could often be rewritten.Excepting the earliest works of this tradition, it has been considered inappropriate to mention death explicitly; rather, metaphoric references such as sunsets, autumn or falling sakura (cherry blossom) suggest the transience of life.Poetry has long been a core part of Japanese tradition, in strong relation to religious practice.The poem should be graceful, natural, and about neutral emotions adhering to the teachings of Buddhism and Shinto.This rewriting was almost never mentioned to keep from tarnishing the deceased person's legacy
Edited sentence: As the time passed, the poem might be rewritten, but this rewriting was almost never mentioned, to keep from tarnishing the deceased person's legacy.Death poems are typically graceful, natural, and emotionally neutral, in accordance with the teachings of Buddhism and Shinto.Excepting the earliest works of this tradition, it has been considered inappropriate to mention death explicitly; rather, metaphorical references such as sunsets, autumn or falling cherry blossom suggest the transience of life.Poetry has long been a core part of Japanese tradition