Original sentence: Charlie tried to drown David in the bath, attempting to avoid Tracy finding out about him and Maria.However, Maria caught Charlie attacking David and confessed to Tracy, leading to a fight on the cobbles
Edited sentence: Charlie tried to scare David by half drowning him in the bath, attempting to avoid Tracy finding out about him and Maria.However, Maria caught Charlie doing this and confessed to Tracy as she saw Charlie's true colours, leading to a fight on the cobbles