Original sentence: Although the Fallen One finds Galactus once again, Galactus simply teleports him back to Thanos to deal with.Thanos manages to defeat the Fallen One by tricking him into igniting a gas giant, which renders him unconscious.Thanos then mindwipes him, forcing him to serve as Thanos' Herald.The Fallen One escapes when the Kyln is destroyed in a conflict between Thanos and the entity the Maker
Edited sentence: Thanos decides to mind-wipe him for employment as a personal Herald.Thanos engages the Fallen One and enrages the latter enough to ignite a gas giant, which renders him unconscious.Thanos realizes that Galactus, severely weakened from the detonation of a nuclear arsenal combined with a planetary impact, might succumb to the assault, which would imbalance the universal order, and offers to handle the matter, whereupon Galactus teleports the Fallen One back to Thanos.The Fallen One escapes when the Kyln is destroyed in a conflict between Thanos and the entity the Maker, whereupon he once more attempts to find and destroy Galactus