Original sentence: Returning to Paris, Dumouriez encountered popular ovation; but he gained less sympathy from the revolutionary government; his old-fashioned methodical method of conducting war exposed him to the criticism of the ardent Jacobins, and a defeat would mean the end of his career
Edited sentence: Returning to Paris, Dumouriez encountered popular ovation; but he gained less sympathy from the extremists in power; his old-fashioned methodical method of conducting war exposed him to the criticism of the ardent Jacobins, and a defeat would mean the end of his career