Original sentence: Kevin spent 16 years at Microsoft Corporation, last as President of Platforms & Services Division,since January 2007, an organization of more than 14,000 employees with responsibility for product development, marketing and strategy for the Windows and Online Services businesses
Edited sentence: Kevin spent 16 years at Microsoft Corporation, last as President of Platforms & Services Division, since January 2007, an organization of more than 14,000 employees with responsibility for product development, marketing and strategy for the Windows and Online Services businesses