Original sentence: In 2005, 17,252 prospective freshmen applied to Cal Poly for entrance in Fall 2006, with 4,121 applicants being accepted—a 24% acceptance rate.Officially also known as Cal Poly Pomona, and commonly called Cal Poly among locals (but never by the university ), it is one of the 23 campuses of the California State University.Over the years, 369 Cal Poly athletes have earned All-American honors in their respective sports, including 90 in men's track and field alone.The students of Cal Poly elected their first female student body president in 1983.Two notable sports facilities serve as home venues for Cal Poly sports
Edited sentence: , it is one of the 23 campuses of the California State University.In 2005, 17,252 prospective freshmen applied to Cal Poly Pomona for entrance in Fall 2006, with 4,121 applicants being accepted—a 24% acceptance rate.Officially also known as Cal Poly Pomona, and commonly called Cal Poly among locals, although naming of Cal Poly without Pomona afterwards is strictly prohibited as it refers to California Polytechnic State University, located in San Luis Obispo.Over the years, 369 Cal Poly Pomona athletes have earned All-American honors in their respective sports, including 90 in men's track and field alone.The students of Cal Poly Pomona elected their first female student body president in 1983.Two notable sports facilities serve as home venues for Cal Poly Pomona sports