Original sentence: Shotaro Kaneda leads his motorcycle gang --- including Kaisuke; Yamagata, Kaneda's right-hand man; and Tetsuo Shima, Kaneda's best friend -- in a gang war with another biker gang called the Clowns
Edited sentence: Shotaro Kaneda leads his motorcycle gang -- including Kaisuke; Yamagata, Kaneda's right-hand man; and Tetsuo Shima, Kaneda's best friend -- in a gang war with another biker gang called the Clowns