Original sentence: After Dupree's partner exited the stage, Dupree entered by being dropped from the ceiling, and landing on stage in a perfect split.Dupree’s performance at the 2001 pageant inspired a tribute to Dupree on the television series Glee, where a character began her dance performance to Holding Out for a Hero by landing on the floor in a split, a mimic of Dupree's performance at the 2001 pageant.In their dance routine at the pageant, Dupree and her performance partner used dips as a climax.The performance included lifts and acrobatics, such as somersaults, and it featured the performance of dips by Dupree and her performance partner
Edited sentence: After Dupree's partner exited the stage, Dupree made a dramatic entrance : she was dropped from the ceiling, and she landed on stage in a perfect split.Dupree’s electrefying performance at the 2001 pageant inspired a tribute to Dupree on the hit television series Glee, where a character began her dance performance to Holding Out for a Hero by landing on the floor in a split, a mimic of Dupree's performance at the 2001 pageant.In their dance routine at the pageant, Dupree and her performance partner used dips as a dramatic climax.The energetic performance included lifts and acrobatics, such as somersaults, and it featured the performance of dips by Dupree and her performance partner