Original sentence: Gemma Ward, (1987) is a model from Perth, Australia.She was signed by Vivian's Model Management based in Australia and IMG in New York.She was the youngest model chosen to be in a Vogue shoot of nine "It girls" in the modeling world
Edited sentence: Gemma Ward, was born in 1987 in Perth, Australia and has taken the fashion industry by storm.Her biggest career highlight was the youngest model chosen to be in a Vogue </i> shoot of nine "It girls" in the modeling world.She was quickly signed by Vivian's Model Management based in Australia and IMG in New York