Original sentence: From 1856 until 1859, Shaw attended Harvard University, where he was a member of the Porcellian Club, but he withdrew before graduating.He then went to Kenyon College in Gambier, Ohio, and also went to work at his uncle's business
Edited sentence: At Harvard, he was a member of the Porcellian Club.From 1856 until 1859, Shaw attended Harvard University, but he withdrew before graduating.He then went to the esteemed Kenyon College in Gambier, OH and also went to work at his uncle's business