Original sentence: According the Ministry backgrounder released at the   time, the affiliation between UBC Vancouver and UBC Okanagan would be “based on the highly successful University of California model” and that “UBC Okanagan and UBC Vancouver will each have an independent senate to set academic priorities for their respective institutions, based regional needs and priorities.In December 2002 the British Columbia Progress Board submitted a report to the provincial government, recognising the need to expand postsecondary education in Okanagan.In March 2004, BC Premier Gordon Campbell and the  UBC  President Martha Piper held a  press conference, announcing that OUC would be dissolved.The  OUC Board was reportedly not invited to the press conference and had not been told in advance of the imminent demise of OUC Board  and removal or the termination or the majority of the OUC board members.The board, chaired by then University of British Columbia president Martha Piper, recommended that the province extend “the mandate of an existing provincial University to Kelowna...”
Edited sentence: According the Ministry backgrounder released at the same time as the announcement was made, the affiliation between UBC Vancouver and UBC Okanagan would be “based on the highly successful University of California model” and that “UBC Okanagan and UBC Vancouver will each have an independent senate to set academic priorities for their respective institutions, based regional needs and priorities.In December 2002 the British Columbia Progress Board submitted a report to the provincial government, recognising the need to expand postsecondary opportunities in Okanagan.In March 2004, BC Premier Gordon Campbell and the University of British Columbia President Martha Piper held an invitation only press conference at the Grand Hotel in downtown Kelowna, announcing that OUC would be dissolved.The OUC Board was not invited to the press conference and had not been told in advance of the imminent demise of OUC and removal of the termination of the majority of the OUC board members.The progress board, chaired by then University of British Columbia president Martha Piper, recommended that the province extend “the mandate of an existing provincial University to Kelowna