Original sentence: The Xbox version, though still receiving solid marks, was derided by critics for the sub-par English voice acting and outdated visuals.This is largely due to the fact that given the high price of the Xbox and availability of an European Dreamcast version, a significant proportion of the fanbase (largely the market of Dreamcast owners) did not own an Xbox to buy it for
Edited sentence: The Xbox version, though still receiving solid marks,  was derided by critics for the sub-par English voice acting and outdated visuals.This is largely due to the fact that given the high price of the Xbox and availability of a European Dreamcast version, a significant proportion of the fanbase (largely the market of Dreamcast owners) did not own an Xbox to buy it for