Original sentence: Ian Eloff (1973), Member of the XV Olympic Winter Games organizing committee, built the computer system used to score and manage the games that is always so crucial to the success of the entire games, rather ironic as his country was purposely excluded from all Olympic games.See "Cool Runnings" - a comedy film and Eddy "the Eagle" Edwards
Edited sentence: Ian Eloff (1973), Member of the XV Olympic Winter Games organizing committee, built the computer system used to score and manage the games, something that is always so crucial to the success of the entire games.See "Cool Runnings" - a comedy film and Eddy "the Eagle" Edwards Sadly the host country (Canada) failed to win any GOLD medals.This was rather ironic as his country was purposely excluded from all Olympic games