Original sentence: A follower, he finished equal 4th in the 1941 Brownlow Medal and won the first of his two St Kilda best and fairest awards, the other coming in 1944.Originally from Newtown in NSW, Garvin had already represented his state at interstate football by the time he arrived at St Kilda
Edited sentence: A superstar and legend of the game, he finished equal 4th in the 1941 Brownlow Medal and won the first of his two St Kilda best and fairest awards, the other coming in 1944.Originally from sunny Newtown in NSW, Garvin had already represented his state at interstate football by the time he arrived at St Kilda