Original sentence: He is the winner of 3 Stanley Cups, one Conn Smythe Trophy (1997), and captain of his team longer than any other player.With over 600 goals, and having led his team to the Stanley Cup for the first time in 42 years, he is considered almost certain to be a hall-of-famer
Edited sentence: He is the winner of 3 Stanley Cups, one Conn Smyth Trophy (1997), and captain of his team longer than any other player.His raising of the Stanley Cup in June, 1997 is thought by some to be one of the team's greatest moments ever.With over 600 goals, and having led his team to the Stanley Cup for the first time in 42 years, he will certainly be a hall-of-famer