Original sentence: His call prompted a row on the Local Government Chronicle (LGC) website with David Walker, Managing Director, Communications & Reporting, at the Audit Commission.It also broke the record for the number of visitors to an LGC article.John Seddon launched a short manifesto in June 2009 calling for the Audit Commission and rest of the 'specifications industry' to be cut.The debate attracted a record number of comments from online readers.The debate was also covered in The Timeson 31st July 2009
Edited sentence: His call prompted a row on the Local Government Chronicle (LGC) website with David Walker, Managing Director, Communications & Reporting, at the Audit Commission, who responded strongly.Seddon launched a short manifesto in June 2009 calling for the Audit Commission and the rest of what he called the 'specifications industry' to be cut.The debate attracted a record number of comments from online readers, and broke the record for the number of visitors to an LGC article.The debate was also covered in newspapers including The Times, which featured it on 31st July 2009