Original sentence: After Israel's capture of the West Bank and Gaza Strip from Egypt and Jordan in the wake of the Six-Day War in 1967, a sense of frustration among Palestinians living in the Israeli-occupied territories had developed.The First Intifada (1987–1991) (also "intifada") was a Palestinian Rebellion against Israeli rule in the Palestinian Territories
Edited sentence: After Israel's capture of the West Bank and Gaza Strip from Egypt and Jordan in the wake of the Six-Day War in 1967, a growing sense of frustration among Palestinians living in the Israeli-occupied territories had developed.The First Intifada (1987–1991) (also "intifada") was a mass Palestinian uprising against Israeli rule in the Palestinian Territories