Original sentence: Obama was explaining how businesses depend on government-provided infrastructure to succeed, but many critics of his remarks claimed that he was underplaying the work of entrepreneurs and giving the government credit for individuals' success.Obama would go on to win a decisive victory over Romney, winning both the popular vote and the electoral college, with 332 electoral votes to Romney's 206
Edited sentence: Liberal commentators derided Romney mainly for the clumsy wording he used, rather than for the point he was trying to get across.Obama was attempting to say that businesses depend on government-provided infrastructure to succeed, but many critics of his remarks claimed that he was underplaying the work of entrepreneurs and giving the government credit for individuals' success.Obama would go on to win reëlection over Romney, winning both the popular vote and the electoral college, with 332 electoral votes to Romney's 206.Romney did not lose a single state that McCain had won four years earlier