Original sentence: " Some of the matters raised included an alleged breach of protocol with the welcome of the Botswanan High Commissioner and a luncheon given for him, at which Jennifer Butler officiated." This writer continued: "What is the Mercury'''s agenda, and what exactly is its motivation, that would make a good story." This writer quoted Richard Herr from the University of Tasmania as saying that there were "real legal and constitution queries over the things Butler is doing.Butler's supporters held he had been hounded from office by monarchists and the Murdoch press; the Murdoch-owned Hobart newspaper The Mercury having ran a series of articles critical of Butler's performance in the lead-up to his resignation.He married Jennifer Grey, his third wife, the day after he was sworn in as Governor and commenced his term by leaving for a three-week overseas honeymoon.He was appointed as the Governor of Tasmania later that year
Edited sentence: " Some of the matters raised included an alleged breach of protocol with the welcome of the Botswanan High Commissioner and a luncheon given for him, at which Dr Jennifer Butler officiated." This writer quoted Dr Richard Herr from the University of Tasmania as saying that there were "real legal and constitution queries over the things Butler is doing.Butler's supporters held he had been hounded from office by monarchists and the Murdoch press.He married Dr Jennifer Grey, his third wife, the day after he was sworn in as Governor and commenced his term by leaving for a three-week overseas honeymoon.He quickly set about restoring the dignity of the office,  and was later that year appointed Governor.It is true that the Murdoch-owned Hobart newspaper The Mercury ran a series of articles critical of Butler's performance in the lead-up to his resignation.This writer continued: "What is the Mercury'''s agenda, and what exactly is its motivation, that would make a good story