Original sentence: He set the school two mile record with a time of 9:52.He was a four-year letterman on the cross country and track teams.He was the youngest County Commissioner in the state at that time.In 1996, he was elected to the Bollinger County Commission.Now that Rod is serving the public, she manages the appraisal company
Edited sentence: Cassie has been a full partner with Rod in caring for the household and the children when he was away on deployments while in the Marine Corps.He was a four-year letterman on the cross country and track teams, and set the school two mile record with a time of 9:52.In 1996, he was elected to the Bollinger County Commission as the youngest County Commissioner in the state at that time.Now that Rod is serving the public, she manages the appraisal company and has been instrumental in its success