Original sentence: In 2009, Pfister -- who had experience in the British film and television industry in the 1980s -- coauthored with novelist Tim Lucas The Weight of Salt and Soul, an original screenplay based on the life of Ishi, a Native American who was the last of his tribe and acclimated to the white man's world during the early twentieth century.Pfister (who initially painted under her married name of Diane Epstein) worked commercially in various media -- including collage, photography and sculpture -- for book jacket and poster illustration before committing herself to painting in 1995
Edited sentence: In 2009, Pfister—who had experience in the British film and television industry in the 1980s—coauthored with novelist Tim Lucas The Weight of Salt and Soul, an original screenplay based on the life of Ishi, a Native American who was the last of his tribe and acclimated to the white man's world during the early twentieth century.Pfister (who initially painted under her married name of Diane Epstein) worked commercially in various media—including collage, photography and sculpture—for book jacket and poster illustration before committing herself to painting in 1995