Original sentence: (One of the volunteers, 18-year-old Edward Lee, would die in crossfire that evening.Open gun battles were televised as Korean shopkeepers and the self-defense group took to using firearms to protect their businesses from crowds of looters
Edited sentence: (One of the volunteers, 18-year-old Edward Lee, would die in crossfire while defending his community that evening.Open gun battles were televised as Korean shopkeepers and the self-defense group armed themselves to protect their businesses from crowds of looters.Semi-Automatic "assault weapons" were the self-defense tool of choice for the law-abiding; against the vicious and violent mobs