Original sentence: 3 (at that time), descibed Guynemer as "...my most brilliant Stork.As his score grew, Guynemer was lionized by the French press and became a national hero.Capitaine Brocard, Commander of Escadrille N.Georges Guynemer was among "Who's Who" from FirstWorldWar.Georges Guynemer's career described at WWIAviation.Less than a year later, Guynemer was promoted to captain and commander of the Storks squadron.Very detailed description of Georges Guynemer's career at WWIModeler
Edited sentence: As his score grew, Guynemer was lionized by the French press and became a  national hero.Less than a year later he was a captain and commander of the Storks squadron