Original sentence: After Blart finishes the game, the phone Vijay gave him rings, a guy named Pahud calls to speak to Vijay's daughter, though Blart explains that her dad gave him the phone (as punishment to his daughter for going over her minutes), and they become quick friends
Edited sentence: After Blart finishes the game, the phone Vijay gave him rings, and a guy named Pahud calls to speak to Vijay's daughter, though Blart explains that her dad gave him the phone (as punishment to his daughter for going over her minutes), and they become quick friends