Original sentence: Gerald Barry Falovitch, (born January 29, 1948) better known as Yank Barry, is a Canadian businessman, former musician, philanthropist, and ex-convict
Edited sentence: Gerald Barry Falovitch, (born January 29, 1948) better known as Yank Barry, is a Canadian businessman, former musician, philanthropist, and ex-convict who has not run from the sins of his past, but instead acknowledged it as a needed turning-point in his life and has since then worked to improve the lives of others