Original sentence: Hip hop music is part of hip hop culture, which began in the Bronx, in New York City in the 1970s primarily by African Americans with Latino American and Afro-Jamaican immigrant influences
Edited sentence: Hip hop music is part of hip hop culture, which began in the Bronx, in New York City in the 1970s primarily by African Americans, with some Puerto Rican and Afro-Jamaican immigrant influences