Original sentence: 39 years old, 'very thin and rather wizened, with a perpetual brooding, worried look in her eyes.George Bowling is a fat, married, middle-aged (45 years old) insurance salesman, with 'two kids and a house in the suburbs'.Hilda Bowling, his wife, belonged to the poverty-striken officer class of an Anglo-Indian family who after marriage has settled-down into a depressed lifeless middle-aged frump.Old Porteus a retired public-school master whose whole life has been lived in an atmosphere of Latin, Greek and cricket
Edited sentence: George Bowling is a fat, middle-aged insurance salesman who dislikes his wife and children and would betray what few principles he has for a couple of pints or a good night out with a prostitute.Hilda Bowling, his wife, belonged to the poverty-striken officer class of an Anglo-Indian family who after marriage had settled-down into a depressed lifeless middle-aged frump.Old Porteus a retired public-school master whose whole life was lived in an atmosphere of Latin, Greek and cricket