Original sentence: Charles Elphinstone succeeded Sir Thomas Hardy as Governor of Greenwich Hospital in September 1839, holding the position until his death at Leamington on 30 October 1840 at the age of 66.His other daughters included Carlota, born in 1817, and Anne Elizabeth, who was born off Venezuela aboard Fleeming's flaship,  in 1828.She married William Cunningham Bontine of Gartmore and Ardoch, and had three sons, the eldest of which was the author, adventurer and politician Robert Bontine Cunninghame Graham
Edited sentence: Another daughter, Anne Elizabeth, who was born off Venezuela aboard Fleeming's flaship,  in 1828,married William Cunningham Bontine of Gartmore and Ardoch, and had three sons, the eldest of which was the author, adventurer and politician Robert Bontine Cunninghame Graham.Charles Elphinstone succeeded Sir Thomas Hardy as Governor of Greenwich Hospital in September 1839, holding the position until his death from influenza at Leamington on 30 October 1840 at the age of 66