Original sentence: After Richard's death, two of his sons (Henry, known as "Henry The Good", and Benjamin) continued the business but it was Richard's grandson, Henry Hoare, who was the most prominent member of the family during this century.Henry was a partner for nearly 60 years and attached great importance to the success of the bank.His nickname, "Henry The Magnificent", derived in part from his influence as a great patron of the Arts, but more particularly because he laid out the gardens at Stourhead in Wiltshire, an estate bought by his father
Edited sentence: After Richard's death, two of his sons (Henry, known as "Henry The Good", and Benjamin) continued the business but it was Richard's grandson, Henry Hoare, who dominated the family through his wealth and personal charisma.Henry was a partner for nearly 60 years: his nickname, "Henry The Magnificent", derived in part from his influence as a great patron of the Arts, but more particularly because he laid out the gardens at Stourhead in Wiltshire, an estate bought by his father