Original sentence: The insane General Melchett was something of a popular caricature of First World War generals like Field Marshal Douglas Haig, who have been controversially portrayed by authors such as Alan Clark and John Laffin as sending men to a senseless death, with seemingly no tactics at all
Edited sentence: The insane General Melchett was something of a popular caricature of First World War generals like Field Marshal Douglas Haig, who have been controversially portrayed by authors such as Alan Clark and John Laffin as sending men to a senseless death, with no tactics at all