Original sentence: Jamie Toulon went on to play guitar for Milwaukee band, Doomsday Cauldron before joining the Star Fucking Hipsters, whose membership also includes Stza of Leftöver Crack.Jamie has since joined his brother in Planned Collapse
Edited sentence: Jamie Toulon went on to play guitar for Milwaukee band, Doomsday Cauldron before joining the Star Fucking Hipsters, the side project of Leftöver Crack member, Stza.Jamie has since left the band and has joined his brother in Planned Collapse