Original sentence: As farmers, the Chagga can grow five crops together on their shambas: coffee, bananas, yams, beans and tomatoes are common.Chagga villages around Mount Kilimanjaro allocate a Shamba, a plot of land for each family.Many Chagga are wage earners in large cities and entrepreneurs in the tourist indursy.The Chagga are known as cultivators and traders.They are also known for their adaptability.They live under the rule of the Mangi, chiefs that govern small, clan-based states.This may have given them an advantage over other ethnic groups, as they had access to education and health care as Christians.Walking around a Chagga village like Njaro is like walking though a farm of banana trees and coffee along dirt tracks
Edited sentence: Coffee, bananas, yams, beans and tomatoes.Many are wealthy, have good businesses, and are in Government.Many have become well educated and now live away from Kilimanjaro but have built their "retirement" home on the mountain.Many would say that the biggest income for Tanzania is the money sent in from abroad by Chaggas who have gained good jobs and honour the family tradition by looking after the "clan".Some would say that it gave them access to education and health care.The Chagga are mostly farmers.Their villages around Kilimanjaro are very large because each family have a plot of land called their Shamba.They are famous for their adaptability.They can grow five crops together on their shambas.Walking around Njaro is like walking though a farm of banana trees and coffee along dirt tracks