Original sentence: " Shanghai High School is marching towards the goal of being "Leading in China, Renowned in the World; Excellent Teaching, Efficient Management".Among the alumni, over eighty have become provincial and state leaders, over twenty have become military generals; over fifty have become academicians; over one hundred have become local government officials; and countless have become professionals of business and industry.In 2003, Shanghai High School became a UNESCO associated School
Edited sentence: Among the alumni, over eighty have become provincial and state leaders, over twenty have become military generals, over fifty have become academicians, over one hundred have become local government officials, and others professionals in business and industry.In 2003, Shanghai High School became a UNESCO associated school