Original sentence: In the violent clashes that followed, at least nine activists were killed and up to sixty activists and ten IDF soldiers injured.It joined a flotilla of ships operated by activist groups from 32 different countries with the stated intention of directly confronting Egypt-Israel’s blockade of the Gaza Strip and bringing in humanitarian aid.The İHH acquired the ship at a cost of $800,000, to be defrayed by public donations, as no shipowner was willing to risk their vessel on the journey
Edited sentence: At least nine activists were killed and up to sixty activists  injured.It joined a flotilla of ships operated by activist groups from 32 different countries with the stated intention of directly confronting Egypt-Israel’s illegal  blockade of the Gaza Strip and bringing in humanitarian aid.The innocent activists were masaacered by the IDF.The İHH acquired the ship at a cost of $800,000, to be defrayed by public donations, as no shipowner was willing to risk their vessel on the journey, given the violence that Israel was sure to unleash