Original sentence: As a small child, Clovis was very mischievous and undisciplined, so his father thought it might be best to place him under the care of a monk who lived in the woods far from the kingdom.In order to save his sister, he tested daily by the monk and learned to withstand injury and still be just as capable a fighter as ever, whether cut by swords or burned by flame.When word reached the monk that King Lawrence's 16 year old daughter Celia has been abducted and held by a fearsome dragon, who wishes break the kingdom's spirit and make it do his bidding, Clovis felt a sense of duty to chase after the dragon and rescue Celia in the name of his father
Edited sentence: As a young child, Clovis was very mischievous and undisciplined, so his father thought it might be best to place him under the care of a monk who lived in the woods far from the kingdom.In order to save his sister, he trained daily with the monk and learned to withstand injury, whether cut by swords or burned by flame, and still be just as capable a fighter as ever.When word reached the monk that King Lawrence's 16 year old daughter Celia had been abducted and held by a fearsome dragon, who wished to break the kingdom's spirit and coerce the kingdom to do his bidding, Clovis felt a sense of duty to chase after the dragon and rescue Celia in the name of his father