Original sentence: Local amenities include a church (St John's - notable as the burial place of former but now dead world champion racing cyclist Reg Harris, and as the venue for an annual cyclists' Christmas Carol service), a post office and the Egerton Arms public house
Edited sentence: Local amenities include a church (St John's - notable as the burial place of former but now dead world champion racing cyclist Reg Harris, and as the venue for an annual cyclists' Christmas Carol service), a post office and the Egerton Arms public house, now sadly a shadow of its former self