Original sentence: By late 1990 investigative journalists, mainly from the Murdoch press, were exploring Maxwell's manipulation of his company's pension schemes.Ian Robert Maxwell (June 10, 1923 – November 5, 1991), British media proprietor, rose from poverty to build a great publishing empire, but was revealed after his mysterious death to have been a corporate criminal on a massive scale.Maxwell's business empire was built on debt and deception.Maxwell's death triggered a flood of revelations about his corrupt business dealings and activities.Rumours circulated for many years about Maxwell's heavy indebtedness and his corrupt business practices.The satirical magazine Private Eye lampooned him as a "Cap'n Bob," but was unable to reveal what it knew about Maxwell's business
Edited sentence: By late 1990 investigative journalists, mainly from the Murdoch press, were exploring Maxwell's apparent manipulation of his company's pension schemes.Ian Robert Maxwell (June 10, 1923 – November 5, 1991), British media proprietor, rose from poverty to build a great publishing empire, but was revealed after his mysterious death to have been involved in complex deals of a questionable nature on a massive scale.Maxwell's death triggered a flood of revelations about his complicated business dealings and activities.Rumours circulated for many years about Maxwell's heavy tendency towards indebtedness and his tough business practices.Some of his critics believe that evidence suggests that his business empire was built on debt and deception.The satirical magazine Private Eye lampooned him as a "Cap'n Bob," but was unable to reveal what it knew about Maxwell's business, if it knew anything at all