Original sentence: How she came to sing with one of gospel's famous groups is a typical Golden Age gospel tale.In 1960, she left the gospel field and began singing pop, her voice having deepened to a contralto and losing the upper register.Jackie Verdell possessed a powerful mezzo-soprano voice, and her performances on records such as "Lord Don't Leave Me", "Following Him", and "I Don't Know What I'd Do" made an impression on the young Aretha Franklin, amongst others
Edited sentence: By that time, her voice had deepened to a contralto and she lost the upper register that had made her voice so effective, although the voice retained its crystalline quality.How she came to sing with one of gospel's greatest groups is a typical Golden Age gospel tale.In 1960, she left the gospel field and began singing pop.Jackie Verdell possessed a powerful mezzo-soprano voice of intense brightness and clarity, and had extraordinary breath control, allowing her to make records such as "Lord Don't Leave Me", "Following Him", and "I don't know what I'd do".Verdell's performances made an impression on many young singers, one of whom was Aretha Franklin