Original sentence: 1st Lt.Adrienne Shelly (as Adrienne Levine) – Actress.Amy Gross – Editor-in-chief of O, The Oprah Magazine.Has appeared in The Sopranos and the musical Beauty and the Beast.He graduated from Jericho High School in 1997 as one of the school's most accomplished athletes.Jamie-Lynn Sigler – Actress.Jon Carin – Keyboardist for the band Pink Floyd (and has played with The Who).Jordan Cila – Professional soccer player.Lynch – 2nd Battalion, 5th Marine Regiment, 1st Marine Division, I Marine Expeditionary Force, Camp Pendleton, California.Played college soccer at Duke University, and currently plays for Red Bull New York.Starred in Hexed and Law & Order
Edited sentence: Adrienne Shelly (as Adrienne Levine) - Actress.Amy Gross - Editor-in-chief of "O, The Oprah Magazine".Has appeared in The Sopranos and The Beauty and the Beast on Broadway.He graduated from Jericho High School in 1997 as one of the school's most accomplished athletes and gifted students.Jamie-Lynn Sigler - Actress.Jon Carin - Keyboardist for the band Pink Floyd (and has played with The Who).Jordan Cila - Professional soccer player.Lynch - 2nd Battalion, 5th Marine Regiment, 1st Marine Division, I Marine Expeditionary Force, Camp Pendleton, California.Played college soccer at Duke University, and currently plays for the New York Red Bulls.Starred in Hexed, Oz and Law & Order