Original sentence: Abdullah is an ethnic Tajik His father, a native Kandahari with deep roots to the Kandahar region, Ghullam Muhayuddin Khan, was a high ranking government official who had risen through the ranks because of a long history of dedicated service in the government
Edited sentence: Abdullah is an ethnic Tajik His father, Ghullam Muhayuddin Khan, is of Kandahar region who was a high ranking government official who had risen through the ranks because of a long history of dedicated service in the government