Original sentence: After wide spread communal violence during the Direct Action Day protests in Calcutta, which led to further communal violence across British India, the creation of Pakistan became inevitable.In 1947, further communal violance displaced millions as independence and partition of British India occurred.Some Bihari and Bengali Muslims fled to the newly created East Pakistan
Edited sentence: In 1947 bloody communal riots displaced millions as India independence and partition occurred together.Some Bihari and Bengali Muslims fled to Pakistan.The Muslim League government of Bengal in the 1940's started the atrocities of the Direct Action Day in Calcutta, which after brutal killings across the country, resulted in the acceptance of Pakistan and the partition