Original sentence: A man of dangerously unpredictable moods, friendly one moment, ferociously hostile the next, was capable of treacherous brutality.All of the trades that handled the transport on Lake Van (the 400 ships and sailing vessels) and crafts (shoemaking, tailoring)  were performed by Armenians in the region.In the city of Van among a thousand shops eighty percent belonged to the Armenians.It was one of the few instances during the Armenian Genocide where Armenians, in an act of self-defense, fought against the Ottoman Empire's armed forces.Jevdet's extremism towards Armenians was more open.Most of the Armenian inhabited localities, including the major city being Van, ranged from 5,000 to 8,000 feet above the sea level.The Armenians generally lived on the shores of the lake Van and around the villages with farming fields close to their housing.The Resistance at Van () was an insurgency against the Ottoman Empire's attempts to eliminate the Armenian population in the vilâyet of Van.The main reason for the conditions of this settlement was because Armenian Grapes (Wine making) were successfully cultivated in the valleys around Lake Van.The other sections of the ottoman population were in the mountain villages
Edited sentence: All of the trades (the four-hundred ships and sailing vessels that handled the transport on Lake Van) and crafts (shoemaking, tailoring) that was performed in the region were in Armenian hands.Given the seriousness of situation developing in Van, Ottoman Government hoped the new governor to be more effective and prevent loss of this large city to Russians.In the city of Van there were nearly a thousand shops, which eighty percent belonged to the Armenians.It was one of the few instances during the Armenian Genocide where regular Armenians fought against the Ottoman Empire's armed forces in regular battle formation.Most of the Armenian inhabited localities, including the major city being Van, ranges from 5,000 to 8,000 feet above the sea level.The Armenians generally lived on the shores of the lake and in villages with fields close to their housing, while the other sections of found in mountain villages.The Resistance at Van (), or Van Rebellion (isyan/Turkish) was an insurgency against the Ottoman Empire's attempts to bring under control the restless and Russian-agitatedArmenian population in the vilâyet of Van.The main reason for the conditions of settlement was because Armenian Grapes (wine making) were successfully cultivated in the valleys around Lake Van