Original sentence: Brooker took things further than this half serious investigation, when in 1999 he called up the then editor of EDGE magazine, Jason Brookes.Pretending to be an angry father, he phoned up enraged by an advert that had appeared in a previous issues for CeX, one that Brooker himself had written and drawn.This large body of work is drawn both from the commissions of his various patrons, and began as a paper comic that was sold to customers at Brooker's former workplace CeX
Edited sentence: Brooker took things further than this half serious investigation, when in 1999 he called up the then editor of EDGE magazine: Jason Brookes.Pretending to be an angry father, he phoned up enraged by an advert that had appeared in a previous issues for CeX; one that Brooker himself had written and drawn.SuperKaylo began as a paper comic, that was sold to customers at Brooker's former workplace CeX.This incredible body of work is drawn both from the commissions of his various patrons and possibly too many Friday nights alone with crayons