Original sentence: After Onassis's death, Tempelsman became more of a "father figure" to her's surviving children, Caroline Kennedy and John F.He has three children by his estranged wife, Lilly Tempelsman.Tempelsman soon moved into Onassis's Fifth Avenue penthouse apartment in New York City.Templesman read a poem during Onassis's funeral service.The couple frequently took walks through Central Park and were photographed doing so in the days preceding her death on May 19, 1994 at age 64 from non-Hodgkin's lymphoma.The two began their relationship in the late 1970s, shortly after the death of Onassis's wealthy second husband, Greek shipping magnate Aristotle Onassis.While still married to Lilly, he became the companion to Jacqueline Kennedy Onassis, former First Lady of the United States
Edited sentence: After Jackie's death, Tempelsman became more of a "father figure" to Jackie's surviving children, Caroline Kennedy and John F.He has three children by his estranged wife, Lilly Tempelsman, but was the long-time companion of Jacqueline Kennedy Onassis, former First Lady of the United States.He read a poem during the funeral service for the former First Lady.Jackie Kennedy died May 19, 1994, of non-Hodgkin's lymphoma, aged 64.Tempelsman soon moved into Jackie's magnificent Fifth Avenue apartment in New York City.The couple frequently took walks through Central Park and were photographed doing so in the final days of Jackie's life.The two began their relationship in the late 1970s, shortly after the death of Jackie's wealthy second husband, Greek shipping magnate Aristotle Onassis