Original sentence: It has a primary school, a village shop and post office, doctor's surgery, two pubs, 5 churches, a large modern village hall and two large recreation grounds.The parish magazine carries information about the range of activities in the village as well as the wide range of village businesses
Edited sentence: It has an excellent primary school, a village shop and post office, doctor's surgery, two pubs, 5 churches, a large modern village hall and two large recreation grounds.The parish magazine is impressive, and carries information about the range of activities in the village as well as the wide range of village businesses