Original sentence: The Diary of William Mackenzie, published by Thomas Telford Publishing in 2000, is a full transcription of Mackenzie's handwritten diaries and it provides insight into his busy life
Edited sentence: It is a full transcription of Mackenzie's handwritten diaries and it provides an intriguing insight into his busy life.The Diary of William Mackenzie, published by Thomas Telford Publishing in 2000, is a fascinating book