Original sentence: As a part of their first major tour following the release of Losing Sleep in the summer of 2009, they will tour with artists such as 3 Doors Down, Secondhand Serenade, The Script and Kelly Clarkson.As part of the campaign, Parachute shared the Nivea Countdown Stage with the Jonas Brothers and Taylor Swift in front of over one million people in Times Square.Their single "She is Love" was used on Nivea's national skincare TV commercial
Edited sentence: As a part of their first major tour following the release of Losing Sleep in the summer of 2009, they will tour with artists such as 3 Doors Down, The Script, Secondhand Serenade,  and Kelly Clarkson.As part of the campaign, Parachute shared the Nivea Countdown Stage with the Jonas Brothers and Taylor Swift in front of over one million people in Times Square for New Year's Eve in 2008.Their songs "She is Love" and "Under Control"  were used on Nivea's national skincare TV commercials