Original sentence: At his parents' wishes, Coelho enrolled in law school and abandoned his dream to become a writer(unfortunately as we all know, he changed his made and became the most overrated writer on this planet, favorite of teens and wanna-be intelectuals) One year later, he dropped out and lived life as a hippie, traveling through South America, North Africa, Mexico, and Europe and becoming immersed in the drug culture of the 1960s
Edited sentence: At his parents' wishes, Coelho enrolled in law school and abandoned his dream to become a writer.One year later, he dropped out and lived life as a hippie, traveling through South America, North Africa, Mexico, and Europe and becoming immersed in the drug culture of the 1960s