Original sentence: According to the Book of Mormon, Akish was a prominent figure in the society of the Jaredites, as related in the Book of Ether.In the book's narrative, Akish first established secret combinations among the Jaredites after they came to the Promised Land.This account has been discussed by non-LDS and LDS authors
Edited sentence: According to the Book of Mormon narrative, Akish first established secret combinations among the Jaredites after they came to the Promised Land.In Mormonism, Akish was a prominent figure in the society of the Jaredites, as related in the Book of Ether(part of the Book of Mormon).The historicity of Akish is not generally accepted by non-Mormon historians or archaeologists.This account has been discussed by non-LSD and LSD authors