Original sentence: Joffe of the State University of New York at Purchase, who wrote that "at the heart of [Abu El-Haj's] critique is an undisguised political agenda that regards modern and ancient Israel, and perhaps Jews as a whole, as fictions... Abu El Haj's anthropology is undone by her ... ill-informed narrative, intrusive counter-politics, and by her unwillingness to either enter or observe Israeli society... The effect is a representation of Israeli archaeology that is simply bizarre...  In the end there is no reason to take her picture of Israeli archaeology seriously, since her selection bias is so glaring..."   Defenders of Abu El-Haj's work note that Joffe has previously served as executive director of Campus Watch, one of the groups opposing her tenure bid
Edited sentence: His Campus Watch position is not noted in the author profile associated with his review.Joffe of the State University of New York at Purchase, who wrote that "at the heart of [Abu El-Haj's] critique is an undisguised political agenda that regards modern and ancient Israel, and perhaps Jews as a whole, as fictions... Abu El Haj's anthropology is undone by her ... ill-informed narrative, intrusive counter-politics, and by her unwillingness to either enter or observe Israeli society... The effect is a representation of Israeli archaeology that is simply bizarre...  In the end there is no reason to take her picture of Israeli archaeology seriously, since her selection bias is so glaring..."   Defenders of Abu El-Haj's work note that Joffe has previously served as executive director of Campus Watch, one of the leading right-wing groups opposing her tenure bid