Original sentence: They argue that advocating circumcision to prevent HIV may also detract from efforts to promote more effective means to protect the spread of the virus through sex such as the use of a condom.They further suggest that circumcising a child strictly to protect him from HIV infection may be seen as permission, or even entitlement, by the child later in life to engage in dangerous sexual practices
Edited sentence: Furthermore, circumcising a child strictly to protect him from HIV infection may be seen as permission, or even entitlement, by the child later in life to engage in dangerous sexual practices.Opponents of circumcision argue that advocating circumcision to prevent HIV may also detract from efforts to promote more effective means to protect the spread of the virus through sex such as the use of a condom