Original sentence: Early on in the book Fang tells Max that he "chooses" her, and they end up "making out" for an extended period of time.Fang is fourteen.Fang often holds Max's hand during the book, and she almost always comments on his hands.Max and Fang love each other passionately, Fang is Max's right hand/wing man.She later again tells Max that Fang loves her in a segment of Maximum Ride 5.When Max is about to rescue Angel, Fang is the only one who really understands how much she needs to do it, and then is surprised but willing when Max passionately kisses him
Edited sentence: Early on in the book Fang tells Max that he "chooses" her over Iggy even though he still loves him, and they end up "making out" for an extended period of time.Fang is fourteen, and has had relationships with two of the other Flock members (Max and Iggy).Max loves Fang passionately, but Fang only considers himself to be Max's right hand/wing man.Max often holds Fang's hand during the book, and she almost always comments on his hands.Max usually put herself into these situations just so this can happen.She later again tells Max that Fang loves her, just not that way, in a segment of Maximum Ride 5.When Max is about to rescue Angel, Fang is the only one who really understands how much she needs to do it, and then is shocked and surprised, but willing, when Max passionately kisses him