Original sentence: Despite these things, population in the island is decreasing year after year.It is one of the largest islands in the Setonaikai strait.It is the second longest span in Japan of this style of bridge.Katazoegahama beach is one of the more popular beaches in the west of Japan.Office workers and bus drivers in town wear colorful aloha shirts as a uniform in summer.Oshima is an island in Yamaguchi prefecture in Japan.The Ooshima Bridge was erected in 1976.The special product is a mandarin orange called "Ooshima mikan".The tide is known as one of the fastest in Japan.The whole island is set aside as a national park.There are 230,000 people on the island.There are beaches, campsites, fishing places and a hang gliding soit.There are several orange groves.There is a Hawaii historical museum, which was built in 1999 in Oshima.There is a tennis court and a roller skate rink, near the beach
Edited sentence: An interesting thing is that office workers and bus drivers in town wear colorful aloha shirts as a uniform in summer.Despite these great things, population in the island is decreasing year after year.In the old days, people live in Ooshima emigranted to Hawaii.It is the second longest span in Japan in this style of bridge.Katazoegahama beach is known as a very beautiful one in the west of Japan.Now they keep relationship each other.Ooshima Bridge was made in 1976.Ooshima is a one of the biggest island in Setonaikai (strait).Ooshima is an island in Yamaguchi prefecture in Japan.The special product is mandarin orange called “Oshima mikan”.The view from mountain is wonderful and the nature is very beautiful.The whole island is appointed as a national park.There are 230000 people on the island.There are a lot of orange groves.There are beaches, campsites, fishing places and a place that we can do hang gliding.There is a Hawaii historical museum, which was built in 1999 in Ooshima.There is a beautiful blue sea and sand.There is a facility of a tennis court, and a roller skate rink, near the beach.Tide is known as one of the fastest in Japan.We can also enjoy many leisure activities.Weekly papers sometimes introduce this beach