Original sentence: He coached several Olympic athletes, including Lynn Davies, a Welsh Olympic Games gold medalist long jumper.He was also the first host of the BBC1 childrens' sports programme We Are the Champions on the BBC - a show he continued presenting up until his death - and was known for his catchphase 'Away you go.Ronald James (`Ron`) Pickering (4 May 1930, London, England – 13 February 1991), was an athletics coach and BBC sports commentator
Edited sentence: Born in London, England, he coached several Olympic athletes, including Lynn Davies, a Welsh Olympic Games gold medallist long jumper.He was also the first host of the BBC1 childrens' sports programme We Are the Champions on the BBC - a show he continued presenting up until his death - and was known for his catchphrase 'Away you go.Ronald James (`Ron`) Pickering (4 May 1930 – 13 February 1991), was an athletics coach and BBC sports commentator