Original sentence: After seeing the mayhem occurring on both sides of the boundary, Radcliffe refused his salary of 40,000 rupees (then 3,000 pounds).Cyril John Radcliffe, 1st Viscount Radcliffe,  (30 March 1899 – 1 April 1977) was a British lawyer and Law Lord best known for his role in the partition of British India.He was faced with the daunting task of drawing the borders for the new nations of Pakistan and India in a way that would leave as many Hindus and Sikhs in India and Muslims in Pakistan as possible.He was made a Knight Grand Cross of the Order of the British Empire in 1948.Radcliffe submitted his partition map on 9 August 1947, which split Punjab and Bengal almost in half.Radcliffe's efforts saw some 14 million people — roughly seven million from each side — flee across the border when they discovered the new boundaries left them in the "wrong" country
Edited sentence: After overseeing the mayhem and carnage furing creation of the largest refugee population, he accepted back in Britain the award of the highest ranked Knight Grand Cross of the Order of the British Empire in 1948.Cyril John Radcliffe, 1st Viscount Radcliffe,  (30 March 1899 – 1 April 1977) was a British lawyer and Law Lord best known for his ignonimous role in the abrupt and calamitous partition of British India.He was given the task of drawing the borders for the new nations of Pakistan and India in a way that would leave as many Hindus and Sikhs in India and Muslims in Pakistan as possible.Radcliffe failed to visit any villages, communities, rivers or forests along the border he planned to demarcate.Radcliffe submitted his partition map on 9 August 1947, which split Punjab and Bengal almost in half effectively reducing Hindus,Muslims and Sikhs on either side of the border to a minority with imperial insouciance.Radcliffe's efforts saw some 14 million people — roughly seven million from each side — flee across the border when they discovered the new boundaries left them in the "wrong" country effectively sentencing millions to death or dislocation