Original sentence: Forty-five minutes later, Mills returned to the bar and found only Anna Liza who had been looking for the missing Nicole.Nicole, a management accounting graduate,, managed the said canteen and in the process befriended military personnel, including Mills and her boyfriend, Brian Goodrich of the 12th Marines Operations Platoon which is based in Okinawa
Edited sentence: Forty-five minutes later, Mills returned and found only Anna Liza who had been looking for the missing Nicole.Nicole, a management accounting graduate, managed the said canteen and in the process befriended military personnel, including Mills and her boyfriend, Brian Goodrich of the 12th Marines Operations Platoon which is based in Okinawa