Original sentence: Tamang visits Pakistan as where he sees Shortcut(Chitrashi Rawat), a 19 year old girl, who is also known to be lucky and any camel she rides wins the race and observes her winning one despite her camel's broken leg
Edited sentence: He observes her winning one despite her camel's broken leg.Tamang visits Pakistan where he comes across Shortcut(Chitrashi Rawat), a 19 year old girl, who is known to be lucky and any camel she rides wins the race