Original sentence: In light of such data, many scholars suggest that academic curricula are not appropriate for young children ...Redshirting may be a response to demands for a higher level of school readiness ..  In a national survey, teachers indicated that 48% of their students were not ready for the current kindergarten curriculum
Edited sentence: In a national survey, teachers indicated that 48% of their students were not ready for the current kindergarten curriculum.In light of such data, many scholars suggest that academic curricula are not appropriate for young children.Redshirting may be a response to demands for a higher level of school readiness