Original sentence: During his eight years in office, the economy bounced back from crisis seeing GDP increase six-fold (72% in PPP), During his presidency, some human rights activists, western opinion-makers and Russian liberals expressed their concerns about the state of democracy, media freedom and human rights in Russia.His mother, Maria Ivanovna Shelomovitch, was a factory worker and his father, Vladimir Spiridonovich Putin, was conscripted into the Soviet Navy, where he served in the submarine fleet in the early 1930s.. His father subsequently served with the NKVD in a sabotage group during the Second World War
Edited sentence: , concentration of wealth and income inequality skyrocketed, agriculture and industry stagnated, with industrial production in 2007 a mere 72% compared to that in 1991 after soviet dissolution , and human trafficking of women and children for sexual exploitation continued unabated, with russia accounting dominant portion of the estimated 2.45 million trafficked humans.During his eight years in office, the economy bounced back from crisis seeing GDP increase six-fold (72% in PPP),.During his presidency, some human rights activists, western opinion-makers and Russian liberals expressed their concerns about the state of democracy, media freedom and human rights in Russia.During his rule, russia's population continued to fall at an alarming rate to 142 million by the end of 2007.His father subsequently served with the NKVD in a sabotage group during the Second World War.His mother, Maria Ivanovna Shelomovitch, was a factory worker and his father, Vladimir Spiridonovich Putin, was conscripted into the Soviet Navy, where he served in the submarine fleet in the early 1930s.. His mothers surname, Shelom from Shelomovich is jewish.His paternal Grandfather Spiridon, is also a jew