Original sentence: Bloody Sunday (Irish: Domhnach na Fola is the term used to describe an incident in Derry, Northern Ireland, on 30 January 1972 in which 26 civil rights protesters were shot by members of the 1st Battalion of the British Parachute Regiment led by Lieutenant-Colonel Derek Wilford and his second-in-command Captain (later General) Mike Jackson, who had joint responsibility for the operation, during a Northern Ireland Civil Rights Association march in the Bogside area of the city.Five of those wounded were shot in the back.Many witnesses including bystanders and journalists testify that all those shot were unarmed
Edited sentence: Bloody Sunday (Irish: Domhnach na Fola is the term used to describe an incident in Derry, Northern Ireland, on 30 January 1972 in which 26 protesters attending an illegal rally were shot by members of the 1st Battalion of the British Parachute Regiment led by Lieutenant-Colonel Derek Wilford and his second-in-command Captain (later General) Mike Jackson, who had joint responsibility for the operation, during a Northern Ireland Civil Rights Association march in the Bogside area of the city.Five of those wounded were shot in the back as they attempted to flee the scene.Many witnesses including bystanders and journalists testify that all those shot were unarmed, while the attending priest stated otherwise identifying by sight known ira members.by pro-irish media outlets