Original sentence: ABC News quoted an Evanston resident as saying, "This is shocking that such a thing could happen in a city of such privilege and affluence.Darrell Pickett and his brother became involved in a fight with another group of teens over some CDs, and one teen from the other group shot him.He was rushed to Evanston Hospital, where he was pronounced dead.On Thursday, June 28, 2007 an ETHS student was gunned down while walking to a corner store near the ETHS campus.The shooting came as a major shock to the community and adds to Evanston Township High School's growing list of problems
Edited sentence: " Pictures of the blood spilled out in the alley was shown across the local news.He was rushed to the acclaimed Evanston Hospital where he was later pronounced dead.Him and his brother were in a spat with another group of teens, over some CDs.On ABC news an Evanston resident stated,"This is shocking that such a thing could happen in a city of such privelige and affluence.On Thursday, June 28, 2007 an ETHS student was gunned down, while walking to a corner store, near the ETHS campus.This was a major shock to the Evanston community and adds to the troubled Evanston Township High School list of problems.When one teen from the other group shot Darryl Pickett