Original sentence: Instead of killing them in combat, he disgraced them by cutting off the topknots of their hair; furthermore Omodaka is further disgraced by having his sword-the soul of the Samuari- broken by Tsugumo-although of the three Omodaka had acted more as a honor bound Samurai should-he has sought out Tsugumo for a ritual duel instead of trying to ambush him; had advised Tsugumo that not only was Tsugumo hovel inconvenient for a duel but also to write a letter of explanation of where he was going so as not to inconvenience his landlord and had even refused to give up and continue to attack Tsugumo even after his sword was broken
Edited sentence: Instead of killing them in combat, he disgraced them by cutting off the topknots of their hair; although of the three Omodaka had acted more as a honor bound Samurai should act: he has sought out Tsugumo for a ritual duel instead of trying to ambush him; had advised Tsugumo that not only was Tsugumo hovel inconvenient for a duel but also to write a letter of explanation of where he was going so as not to inconvenience his landlord and had refused to give up and continue to attack Tsugumo even when he is disgraced after his sword-the soul of a Samuari- was broken