Original sentence: In 2014, the owner of the billboard offered to donate $1 million to the Angels Baseball Foundation if a home run ball landed in the can on the fly.On September 19, 2017, a home run ball landed in the can after bouncing.Some commentators were upset that a donation wasn't made "due to a lame technicality", causing a public relations embarrassment
Edited sentence: In 2014, a charity promotion was created indicating that $1 million would be contributed to the Angels Baseball Foundation “any time an Angels batter parked a home run ball in the can.So, no contribution.That’s when it transpired that there was a catch all along: The ball had to enter the can on the fly.Upton’s homer ball bounced at least once before caroming into the can.Well, left-fielder Justin Upton did just that last Tuesday, September 19, 2017 in the ninth inning