Original sentence: According to the bodyguard, shortly after 3 pm, he checked on her again and observed her lying in the same position as before, leading to a further check, in which he concluded that she was not breathing and had no pulse.By summer 2011, she had fallen into a pattern of abstaining from alcohol for a few weeks, and then relapsing.Winehouse began binge drinking with the drug alcohol in 2008 after ceasing her dependence on illicit drugs
Edited sentence: According to the bodyguard, shortly after 3 pm, he checked on her again and observed her lying in the same position as before, leading to a further check in which he concluded she was not breathing and had no pulse.By summer 2011, she had fallen into a pattern of abstaining for a few weeks, and then relapsing.Winehouse began binge drinking in 2008 after kicking a drug habit