Original sentence: Aubrey de Grey's claim that the only significant effect of nuclear DNA (nDNA) damage is cancer is open to dispute, and this impacts both of his last two strategies (neither of which is appropriately described as "repair").Yet Dr.de Grey collaborates extensively with experimental scientists, publishes several peer-reviewed scientific papers per year, organizes scientific conferences, and is editor-in-chief of the peer-reviewed journal Rejuvenation Research
Edited sentence: Aubrey de Grey's claim that cancer is the only significant effect of nuclear DNA (nDNA) damage and mutation, and corruption of the epigenetic state of cells is widely disputed by experienced biologists, and this impacts both of his last two strategies (neither of which is appropriately described as "repair") and the overall claim of the comprehensiveness of SENS.In particular, it has come under heavy criticism for presenting an extreme simplification of the true challenge of curing aging