Original sentence: In the same way they celebrated last years only winning game, The Whalers celebrated by jumping into the frigid waters of the Arctic Ocean.Led by of Cathy Parker, the wife of one of their football coaches, the Bartram Trail High School in Jacksonville, FL worked with communities across the country to raise $800,000 to install the ProGrass Artificial Turf football field in Barrow.The game ended with a come-from-behind win by the Barrow Whalers with a score of 18 to 16
Edited sentence: In the same way they celebrated last years only winning game, The Whalers celebrated their win with their new tradition of jumping into the frigid waters of the Arctic Ocean that borders their new turf field.Led by the "vision" of Cathy Parker,  the wife of one of their football coaches,  the Bartram Trail High School in Jacksonville, FL worked with communities across the country to raise $800,000 to install the ProGrass Artificial Turf football field in Barrow.The game ended with a heart-stopping, come-from-behind win by the Barrow Whalers with a score of 18 to 16