Original sentence: She described her intellectual development and her feelings realising there is a bias against women, after being denied a traineeship at the Australian foreign service.This resulted in her mother enrolling her at Abbotsleigh, a private girls school, where Conway found intellectual challenge and social acceptance
Edited sentence: She described her intellectual development and her feelings realising there is a bias against women, after being denied a prestigious traineeship at the Australian foreign service.This resulted in her mother enrolling her at Abbotsleigh, a prestigious private girls school, where Conway found intellectual challenge and social acceptance