Original sentence: Graham was sixteen when he set out alone from Southern California and headed west in his 24-foot sloop.He was originally given two kittens for company, that he named Joliette and Suzette, and through his travels lost and gained several more, ultimately docking with Kili, Pooh and Piglet at the end of the journey.National Geographic Magazine carried the story, and he co-wrote a book, title Dove, detailing his journey
Edited sentence: Graham was just sixteen when he set out alone from Southern California and headed west in his 24-foot sloop.He was originally given two kittens for company named Joliette and Suzette, and through his travels lost and gained several more, ultimately docking with Kili, Pooh and Piglet at the end of the journey.National Geographic Magazine carried the story, and he co-wrote a book detailing his journey titled Dove