Original sentence: A year after Sora died, Orihime met Tatsuki who defended her from bullies that verbally and physically abused her because of her hair, which Orihime had cut short in an attempt to staunch the bullying.However, Orihime refused to wear them because she said they were childish.One day, Sora gave Orihime a pair of hairpins.Orihime has worn the hairpins ever since.They have been best friends ever since, with Orihime long since returning to wearing her hair long in a show of faith for Tatsuki's vow to protect her
Edited sentence: A year after Sora died, Orihime met Tatsuki who defended her from bullies that verbally and physically abused her.Eventually, her abusers went so far as to visciously hack her hair off.Miserable from another day of bullying, she angrily refused to wear them, claiming they were too childish.Orihime has worn the hairpins every single day, regretting never having thanked her brother.She was forced to cut it even shorter, just below her face, in an attempt to salvage the damage that had been done.Shortly thereafter, Sora gave Orihime a pair of hairpins.They have been best friends ever since; and Orihime promised to grow and keep her hair long again in a show of faith for Tatsuki's vow to protect her.When Sora asked her why she would cut off her beautiful hair, she told him she was just in the mood for a change because she was hesitant to tell him what really happened to her