Original sentence: Harman chose to use a 23% figure which was almost doubled the real divide as it failed to take account of the fact that women were far more likely to work in part time jobs which generally have significantly lower rates of pay
Edited sentence: Harman chose to use a 23% figure which it was said almost doubled the real divide as it failed to take account of the fact that women were far more likely to work in part time jobs which generally have significantly lower rates of pay