Original sentence: For additional strength and stamina, Arabian blood was added in the 1700s.Some believe that the Connemara developed from Scandinavian ponies that the [[Vikings] first brought to [[Ireland].The Connemara has a lively but eager and trainable temperament, tends to be long-lived and is described as intelligent.The Connemara region in County Galway, Western Ireland, where the breed first became recognized as a distinct type, is a very harsh landscape, thus giving rise to a pony breed of hardy, strong individuals.They are ridden by both children and adults, held to be a very versatile pony breed, competitive in show jumping, dressage and eventing.They have enough stamina for endurance riding and are shown in harness.Today, Connemaras are bred in Ireland and the Unite Kingdom, but also on the European Continent, the United States, Canada, Australia, and South Africa.Too much [[crossbreeding] began to dilute the pony bloodlines, so the Connemara Pony Breeders’ Society, founded in 1923, and worked to preserve the type
Edited sentence: For strength and stamina, Arabian blood was added in the 1700s.Some believe that the Connemara is from the Scandinavian ponies that the Vikings first brought to Ireland.The Connemara ponies originate here,but today here they are also bred on the European Continent, in the USA, Canada, Australia and South Africa.The Connemara region in County Galway Western Ireland is a very harsh landscape.The harsh lands made these horses into hardy, strong individuals.They are held to be the most versatile of all pony breeds, succeeding in jumping, dressage and most of all in eventing competitions covering difficult ground.They are ridden by both children and adults, and excel in all sport horse competition, including dressage, show jumping, eventing, and driving.They have enough stamina for endurance riding  and show the performance sought after for good modern harness horses.Today the ponies live all across the globe.Too much cross-breeding began to dilute the pony bloodlines, so the Connemara Pony Breeders’ Society, founded in 1923, worked to preserve the type.Vivacious, long-lived, intelligent, trainable, reliable, eager - these are characteristics that others besides the Irish ascribe to the Connemara pony