Original sentence: After displaying interest in acting at a young age, Strickland commenced her studies while working in minor roles in motion pictures by filmmakers such as M.Media sources in 2004 such as Todd Gilchrist, Mike Altamura, Matt Soergel and Clint Morris acknowledged Strickland as one of Hollywood's rising stars, while Ray Colbert considered her a "major player in the industry"
Edited sentence: ), while Ray Colbert considered her a "major player in the industry" (although one may question the judgement of this universally acknowledged "minor player").After displaying interest, Strickland commenced her studies while working in minor roles in motion pictures by filmmakers such as M.Media sources in 2004 such as Todd Gilchrist, Mike Altamura, Matt Soergel and Clint Morris acknowledged Strickland as one of Hollywood's rising stars (but, one might ask, aren't they all