Original sentence: Bu coincident both these men attended the local primary school at the same time and are still heavily involved in the local community.In later life he bacame quite wealthy as a result of his indepth knowledge of the stock market.John O Brien and Colin Gallagher are two of Barefield's Most famous sons.Meanwhile Colin Gallagher has been a philanthropist and major contributor to the Arts here in Ireland.She is an agent to famous Oscar winning actresses like Kate Winslet, Cate Blanchett & Marion Cottiard
Edited sentence: By coincident both these men attended the local primary school at the same time and are still heavily involved in the local community.In later life he became quite wealthy as a result of his indepth knowledge of the stock market.John O Brien and Colin Gallagher are two of Barefield's most famous sons.Meanwhile Colin Gallagher has been a philanthropist and major contributor to the Arts in Ireland.She is an agent to famous Oscar-winning actresses like Kate Winslet, Cate Blanchett and Marion Cottiard