Original sentence: She was educated at a lyceum, then for one year at a business school in a convent where she had average grades, a talent for athletics and is said to have had the "dreamy beauty of a deformed fetus"
Edited sentence: She was educated at a lyceum, then for one year at a business school in a convent where she had average grades, a talent for athletics and is said to have had the "dreamy beauty of a deformed fetus" though in actuality Eva was rather plain looking or somewhat pretty