Original sentence: Bonwit agreed to let Odlum's wife Hortense serve as a consultant to the company in 1932, and two years later--dogged by poor health and saddened by the death of his wife--he sold the firm to Odlum's Atlas Corporation.In 1930 Bonwit chose a new address farther up Fifth Avenue--the former A
Edited sentence: Bonwit agreed to let Odlum's wife Hortense serve as a consultant to the company in 1932, and two years later—dogged by poor health and saddened by the death of his wife—he sold the firm to Odlum's Atlas Corporation.In 1930 Bonwit chose a new address farther up Fifth Avenue—the former A