Original sentence: Aeriel, determined to rescue her mistress, returns to the peak from which Eoduin was stolen and waits until the vampyre should return.Eoduin, a beautiful young woman, is abducted by a vampyre while out with her slave Aeriel gathering flowers, and carried off to be the vampyre's bride.Eventually, he comes for her as well, but not to be his bride.She is to continue her existence as a slave, but now she has thirteen mistresses, the vampyre's brides, who have all been reduced to wraiths by the stealing of their blood and souls
Edited sentence: Aeriel, determined to avenge her mistress, returns to the peak from which Eoduin was stolen and waits until the vampyre should return.Eoduin, a beautiful young woman, is abducted by a vampyre while out with her slave Aeriel gathering flowers, and carried off to be a vampyre's bride.Eventually, he comes for her and she can not kill him becuase of his beauty and power, and he takes her but not to be his bride.She is to continue her existence as a slave, but now she has thirteen mistresses, the vampyre's brides, who have all been reduced to wraiths by the stealing of their blood, hearts, and souls.his death will also prevent him becoming a full vampire and joining with his six other brothers and ruleing the world