Original sentence: García Lorca's stay in America, particularly New York -- his first adult experience of a democratic society, albeit one he considered to be dominated by rampant commercialism and the casual social oppression of minority groups -- acted as a catalyst for some of his most daring work.Murdered by Nationalist partisans at the age of 38 at the beginning of the Spanish Civil War, he is now considered by many to be one of the great artists of modern Spain
Edited sentence: García Lorca's stay in America, particularly New York -- his first adult experience of a democratic society, albeit one dominated by rampant commercialism and the casual social oppression of minority groups -- acted as a catalyst for some of his most daring work.Murdered by Nationalist partisans at the age of 38 at the beginning of the Spanish Civil War, he is now considered one of the great artists of modern Spain