Original sentence: As would be expected from any old Andrean, all went flawlessly.Ian Eloff (1973), member of the XV Olympic Winter Games (1988) organizing committee, built the computer system used to score and manage the games, something that is always so crucial to the success of the entire games.This was rather ironic as his country was purposely excluded from all Olympic games
Edited sentence: As would be expected from any old Andrean, it all worked flawlessly.Ian Eloff (1973), member of the XV Olympic Winter Games (1988) organizing committee, built the computer system used to score and manage the Olympic games - rather ironic as S.was purposely excluded from all Olympic games, yet the success of the entire games rested on the quality of his efforts