Original sentence: Between  and Dumbarton, the route is shared with the North Clyde Line before branching northward at Craigendoran Junction towards , the section where the West Highland Line is generally accepted to "begin proper".Carrying on northwards, the line descends above the shores of Loch Treig and through the narrow Monessie Gorge.It gives high-level views of the Gareloch and Loch Long before emerging alongside the northwesterly shores of Loch Lomond, then climbs Glen Falloch.The diverging route at Crianlarich runs through Glen Lochy to  and through the Pass of Brander to reach salt water at  and  before a final climb over a hill to.The station at  on the moor is one of the most remote stations in Britain and is not accessible by any public roads
Edited sentence: Between Westerton and Dumbarton, the route is shared with the North Clyde Line before branching northward at Craigendoran Junction towards Garelochhead, the section where the West Highland Line is generally accepted to "begin proper".Carrying on northwards, the line descends in further spectacular fashion above the shores of Loch Treig and through the narrow Monessie Gorge.It gives scenic high-level views of the Gareloch and Loch Long before emerging alongside the northwesterly shores of Loch Lomond, then climbs Glen Falloch.The diverging route at Crianlarich runs through Glen Lochy to Dalmally and through the spectacular Pass of Brander to reach salt water at Taynuilt and Connel Ferry before a final climb over a hill to Oban.The station at Corrour on the moor is one of the most remote stations in Britain and is not accessible by any public roads