Original sentence: Sluggers Harmon Killebrew and Bob Allison, who had already been stars in Washington, were joined by Tony Oliva and Zoilo Versalles, and later second baseman Rod Carew and pitcher Jim Perry, winning the American League pennant in 1965.The league granted his request, and the team moved to Minnesota after the 1960 season, setting up shop in Metropolitan Stadium, while Washington fielded a brand new "Washington Senators" (which later became the Texas Rangers prior to the 1972 season)
Edited sentence: (Losing to the Los Angeles Dodgers, however.) Versailles was a near-unanimous winner of the American League MVP Award in that pennant-winning year.Out of 20 ballots, Versailles received 19 first-place votes, and his teammate Oliva received the other one.Pennant), for the first time since 1924, and thus they played in the World Series that October, for just the second time.Perry, a pitching star for years, won the American League Cy Young Award in 1970, with a 24 - 12 record.The Twins advanced quickly, and they won the championship of the American League in 1965 (the A.The Twins won the first two  American League Western Division championships, in 1969 and 1970, with the star play of Perry, Killebrew, Oliva, Allison, and Carew.The league granted his request, and the team moved to Minnesota after the 1960 season, setting up shop in Metropolitan Stadium, while Washington fielded a brand new "Washington Senators" (which also would move away - after just one decade in Washington, becoming the Texas Rangers prior to the 1972 season).The sluggers Harmon Killebrew and Bob Allison, who had already been young stars in Washington, was joined by Tony Oliva and Zoilo Versalles, and later on, the sharp-hitting second baseman, Rod Carew, and the star pitcher Jim Perry.This was the Twins franchise first appearance in any World Series or any playoff game whatever