Original sentence: Among the official records of her reign are assertions that her father, Thutmose I, named her as his direct heir, and later, official depictions of Hatshepsut show her dressed in the full regalia of a pharaoh, including the traditional false beard of pharaohs to indicate that she ruled Egypt in her own right.Both Wadjmose and Amenose were prepared to succeed their father, but neither have known to live beyond adolescence.Hatshepsut assumed the position of pharaoh, however, her reign as king is now usually given as twenty-two years.The date of her death is known to have occurred in either 1458 or 1457 BC; hence, she may have become pharaoh some time in or just after 1479 BC.Upon the death of her father in 1493 BC, Hatshepsut thought to have married her half-brother, Thutmose II, and assumed the title of Great Royal Wife
Edited sentence: Among the official records of her reign are assertions that her father, Thutmose I, named her as his direct heir and later, official depictions of Hatshepsut show her dressed in the full regalia of a pharaoh, including the traditional false beard of pharaohs to indicate that she ruled Egypt in her own right.Both Wadjmose and Amenose were prepared to succeed their father, but neither lived beyond adolescence.Hatshepsut assumed the position of pharaoh, however, and her reign as king is now usually given as twenty-two years.The date of her death is known to have occurred in either 1458 or 1457 BC; hence, she must have become pharaoh some time in or just after 1479 BC.Upon the death of her father in 1493 BC, Hatshepsut married her half-brother, Thutmose II, and assumed the title of Great Royal Wife