Original sentence: After receiving his Master's degree in Political Science at Korea University, in 1968 Jae Chul Shin came to the United States of America as the U.He formed the US.Jae C.Later, he joined Seoul Moo Duk Kwan central gym and began serious study under Hwang Kee, a founder of the Korean Moo Duk Kwan system.Shin is the founder of the World Tang Soo Do Association,.The year he came to the United States of America, Black Belt Magazine honored him for all time by devoting a full chapter to him in the book, "20th Century Warriors," putting him in the company of legendary martial arts figures
Edited sentence: After receiving his Master's degree in Political Science at Korea University, in 1968 Master Jae Chul Shin came to the United States of America as the U.Grandmaster Jae C.Grandmaster Shin is respected as a true leader, teacher and master of masters.Grandmaster Shin, one of the most respected and well known masters in this century, is one of the few masters who has devoted his entire life to the traditional martial arts.He formed the U.He has evolved these separate arts into one of the finest and most effective martial arts; The World Tang Soo Do system.His six fields of expertise include self-defense, forms, breaking, weapons, health care, and meditation.Later, he joined Seoul Moo Duk Kwan central gym and began serious study under Grandmaster Hwang Kee, a founder of the Korean Moo Duk Kwan system.Shin is the founder of the World Tang Soo Do Association, and is one of the leading figures of martial arts in the world today.The year he came to the United States of America, Black Belt Magazine honored him for all time by devoting a full chapter to him in the book, "20th Century Warriors," putting him in the company of the most legendary martial arts figures ever.This traditional Korean Martial Art was quickly accepted and soon grew in popularity throughout the World