Original sentence: In 1544, at a camp at Sabzawar, 93 miles south of Herat, she gave birth to a daughter, thereafter she returned from Persia with the army given to Humayun by Shah of Iran, Tahmasp I, and at Qandahar met Dildar Begum, Babur's wife and her son, Mirza Hindal.She met Mughal Emperor, Humayun, during his exile, as a thirteen year old girl in Mirza Hindal's household, though initially she refused to meet him, eventually at the insistence of Babar's wife, Dildar Begum, agreed to marry the Emperor in September, 1541 (Monday Jumada al-awwal 948 AH), and became his junior wife, after Bega Begum (later known as Haji Begum, after Hajji) who was the elder wife.Two years later, she gave birth future Emperor, Akbar on October 15, 1542 (fourth day of Rajab, 949 AH), at the Rajput Fortress of Umarkot in Sindh , where the Mughal Emperor Humayun and she, were taking refuge, after his exodus from Delhi, due to the armies of Lodhi dynasty ruler, Sher Shah Suri
Edited sentence: In 1544, at a camp at Sabzawar, 93 miles south of Herat, she gave birth to a daughter, thereafter she returned from Persia with the army given to Humayun by Shah of Iran, Tahmasp I, and at Qandahar met Dildar Begum, and her son, Mirza Hindal.Mughal Emperor, Humayun was in exile after his exodus from [[Delhi], due to the armies of Lodhi dynasty ruler, Sher Shah Suri.She met Humayun, as a thirteen year old girl in Mirza Hindal's household.Though initially she refused to meet him, eventually at the insistence of Babar's wife, Dildar Begum, she agreed to marry the Emperor in September, 1541 (Monday Jumada al-awwal 948 AH), and became his junior wife, after Bega Begum (later known as Haji Begum, after Hajji) who was the elder wife.Two years later, she gave birth future Emperor, Akbar on October 15, 1542 (fourth day of Rajab, 949 AH), at the Rajput Fortress of Umarkot in Sindh , where the Mughal Emperor Humayun and she, were taking refuge