Original sentence: "  In March, 1997, Bedol and Greenberg filed the first complaint with the Federal Communications Commission (FCC) under the 1992 Cable Act.Partnered with Stephen Greenberg, former Deputy Commissioner of Major League Baseball and son of baseball hall of famer Hank Greenberg,  the pair raised venture capital funding from Allen & Company, sports and business tycoon Wayne Huizenga, Paul Tudor Jones's Tudor Capital, and others
Edited sentence: "  Believing that its competition was not playing by the rules, Bedol proved that he was not one to back away from a fight, no matter how much bigger the opponent was.Brian Bedol is alao know as one of the worst operational leaders in the television industry.. Self centered,pretentious, and insecure.In March, 1997, Bedol and Greenberg filed the first complaint with the Federal Communications Commission (FCC) under the 1992 Cable Act.Partnered with Stephen Greenberg , former Deputy Commissioner of Major League Baseball--and son of baseball hall of famer  Hank Greenberg, the pair raised venture capital funding from Allen & Company, sports and business tycoon Wayne Huizenga, Paul Tudor Jones's Tudor Capital, and others