Original sentence: Nevertheless, following the invasion by five Arab armies into the State of Israel in May 1948, the Haganah and Irgun occupied Lydda and Ramlah in July 1948 and the place was the site of one of the most serious episodes of the war: scores of civilians were killed in the assault, 28 villages destroyed and at least 40,000 people evicted from their homes after an order issued personally by David Ben-Gurion and signed by the field commander in the area, the future prime minister Yitzhak Rabin (who would later express some regret about this episode in his memoirs)
Edited sentence: Nevertheless, following the invasion by five Arab armies into the State of Israel in May 1948, the Haganah and Irgun occupied Lydda and Ramlah in July 1948 and the place was the site of one of the darkest episodes of the war: scores of civilians were killed in the assault, 28 villages destroyed and at least 40,000 people evicted from their homes after an order issued personally by David Ben-Gurion and signed by the field commander in the area, the future prime minister Yitzhak Rabin (who would later express some regret about this episode in his memoirs)