Original sentence: After the main cast of these four characters, Takaya next developed Kisa Sohma, whom she described as "in competition to be the first or second most beautiful character.The next three characters Takaya developed were Yuki, Kyo, and Shigure Sohma, and that Kyo "the first character whose personality and looks really hit me...without any hesitation
Edited sentence: Takaya described these four characters, Tohru, Yuki, Kyo, and Shigure, as the main case.The first character she developed after them was Kisa Sohma, whom she described as "in competition to be the first or second most beautiful character.The next characters Takaya developed were Yuki, Kyo, and Shigure Sohma, and of these Kyo was "the first character whose personality and looks really hit me...without any hesitation