Original sentence: " This introduction led to Valora's getting an agent before she moved to Hollywood.One day, while shopping for groceries, Dick Clayton approached her.She appeared in a 1962 episode of Laramie, 'Double Eagles', worked on 'Two Faces Of Treason', a segment of NBC's The DuPont Show of the Week in 1963, featured in 'The Girl On The Pinto', a 1967 episode of TV series The Virginian, featured as Kate in the 1967 western The War Wagon.She played Daras in the 1967 Season Two episode, Patterns Of Force
Edited sentence: " This introduction led to Valora getting an agent before she moved to Hollywood, but though her go-between was highly respected (Dick Clayton), she didn't just jump into the perfect showcase role.One day, while shopping for groceries, a peculiar little man approached her.Valora never did act in the film "Up Your Teddy Bear", though it was made to seem that way