Original sentence: Hassan Nemazee is a multimillionaire Iranian-American investment banker.Most of his family's property was seized by the new Iranian government.Nemazee was abroad at the time of the Iranian revolution and has not returned to the country since.Nemazee was born in Washington, D
Edited sentence: Hassan Nemazee is a multimillionaire Iranian-American investment banker, Iranian expatriate, and major contributor to the Democratic Party; he has been a longstanding   Nemazee was born in Washington, D.Nemazee, a naturalized American citizen, was abroad at the time of the Iranian revolution, and has not been able to return to the country since; most of his family's property was seized by the new Iranian government