Original sentence: The 25th of July marked the costliest single day for a single Canadian battalion since the Dieppe Raid of 1942.When they attacked the ridge at 09:30 (in now broad daylight while walking in a straight line up the ridge), they were easy targets for well entrenched German defenders, who were equipped with tanks, 88-mm antitank guns, Nebelwerfer rocket artillery, machine gun nests and dozens of mortar pits
Edited sentence: July 25, 1944, marked the bloodiest day for a single battalion since the disastrous Dieppe Raid of 1942.When they attacked the ridge at 09:30 (in now broad daylight while walking in a straight line up the ridge), they were easy targets for well entrenched German defenders, who were armed with Panzers, 88-mm antitank guns, Nebelwerfer rocket artillery, machine gun nests and dozens of mortar pits