Original sentence: In her June 21, 2004 speech  at a Conference on Confronting anti-Semitism: Education for Tolerance and Understanding, sponsored by the United Nations Department of Information and in her articles , human rights scholar, activist and Fellow at the Hebrew University in Jerusalem Anne Bayefsky advocated the necessity of UN reforms and criticized some of the UN policies and practices:
Edited sentence: In her June 21, 2004 speech  at a Conference on Confronting anti-Semitism: Education for Tolerance and Understanding, sponsored by the United Nations Department of Information and in her articles , human rights scholar and activist Anne Bayefsky advocated the necessity of UN reforms and criticized some of the UN policies and practices: