Original sentence: In order to improve the public transport connections of Kumpula, considered by many to low and unreliable, a private group consisting of members of the Finnish Tramway Society and students of Helsinki University of Technology drew up plans for a new tram line linking Arabia to Pasila railway station.The proposal gained interest from the public, and on 4 April 2009 the City Planning Board of Helsinki mandated that an official study would be made on a tram line linking Munkkiniemi to Arabia or Kalasatama via Pasila and Kumpula, with proviosions made for further lenghtening the line to Otaniemi (in Espoo) in the west and Viikki in the east.The proposed line, provisionally numbered line 5, could either utilise the disused freight railway line in Southern Kumpula or only existing tram tracks, including a on Sturenkatu between Mäkelänkatu and Hämeentie presently only used for depot movements
Edited sentence: A private group consisting of members of the Finnish Tramway Society and students of Helsinki University of Technology drew up plans for a new tram line linking Arabia to Pasila railway station in order to improve the public transport connections of Kumpula.Many consider the existing public transport connections sparse and unreliable.The proposal gained public interest , and on 4 April 2009 the City Planning Board of Helsinki mandated that an official study would be made on a tram line linking Munkkiniemi to Arabia or Kalasatama via Pasila and Kumpula, with proviosions made for further lenghtening the line to Otaniemi (in Espoo) in the west and to Viikki in the east.The proposed line, provisionally numbered line 5, could either utilise the disused freight railway line in Southern Kumpula or only existing tram tracks, including a stretch on Sturenkatu between Mäkelänkatu and Hämeentie that is only used for depot movements presently