Original sentence: Palm Bay's recent history began in the 1850s when the first European settlers built homes along Turkey Creek.The Timucuan Indians, attracted to the mouth of Turkey Creek at the Indian River by fresh water springs, fish, oysters, and wildlife, are thought to have been the first inhabitants in the Palm Bay area
Edited sentence: Palm Bay's recent history began in the 1850s when the first European settlers, also drawn by the bounty and beauty of the area, built homes along Turkey Creek.The Timucuan Indians, attracted to the mouth of Turkey Creek at the Indian River by fresh water springs and plentiful fish, oysters, and wildlife, are thought to have been the first civilization in the Palm Bay area