Original sentence: Following Henry VIII's decision in 1534 to break with Rome, many of the inmates of Syon expressed themselves favourable to Henry' s supremacy over the English Church, and even converted recalcitrant monks from other monasteries to do likewise
Edited sentence: Following Henry VIII's decision in 1534 to throw off the papal yoke, many of the inmates of Syon expressed themselves favourable to Henry' s supremacy over the English Church, and even converted recalcitrant monks from other monasteries to do likewise