Original sentence: After the failure of peace negotiations, in which Scipio displayed great moderation, he defeated Hannibal in a decisive battle near Zama (October 19, 202 BC), despite being outnumbered.He refused the many further honours which the people would have thrust upon him.Scipio was welcomed back to Rome with the cognomen of Africanus.The following year he destroyed two combined armies of the Carthaginians and Numidians.The old-fashioned aristocracy of Rome, who disliked his luxurious tastes and affinity for Greek culture and still entertained a wholesome dread of Hannibal, opposed the idea; all Scipio could obtain was permission to cross over from Sicily to Africa, if it appeared to be in the interests of Rome
Edited sentence: After the failure of peace negotiations in which Scipio displayed great moderation, he defeated Hannibal in a decisive battle near Zama (October 19, 202 BC), despite being outnumbered.Next year he destroyed two combined armies of the Carthaginians and Numidians.Scipio was welcomed back to Rome with the cognomen, or nickname, of Africanus, and had the good sense to refuse the many honours which the people would have thrust upon him.The old-fashioned aristocracy of Rome, who disliked his luxurious tastes and affinity for Greek culture, and still entertained a wholesome dread of Hannibal, opposed the idea; all Scipio could obtain was permission to cross over from Sicily to Africa, if it appeared to be in the interests of Rome