Original sentence: This resulted in her mother enrolling her at Abbotsleigh, a private girls school, where Conway found intellectual challenge and social acceptance.Upon graduation, Conway sought a trainee post in the Department of External Affairs, but the conservative all-male committee was intimidated by her and she was refused for being, as she learned later, "too good looking" and "too intellectually aggressive
Edited sentence: This resulted in her mother enrolling her at Abbotsleigh, a prestigious private girls school, where Conway found intellectual challenge and social acceptance.Upon graduation, Conway sought a prestigious trainee post in the Department of External Affairs, but the conservative all-male committee was intimidated by her and she was refused for being, as she learned later, "too good looking" and "too intellectually aggressive