Original sentence: " After Bridwell returned it with extensive editorial changes Beck attempted to draw the rewritten version but dis-satsfied with it he eventually returned the Bridwell draft to DC and tore up the artwork he had drawn
Edited sentence: " After Bridwell returned it with extensive editorial changes Beck attempted to draw the rewritten version but was so dissatisfied with it that he eventually returned the Bridwell draft to DC and tore up the artwork he had drawn