Original sentence: " When she starts middle school, her classmates harass and ostracize her due to her naturally tawny hair and golden eyes, an effect of her curse.In an author's note, Natsuki Takaya described her as "in competition to be the first or second most beautiful character" and also described her as a "girly-girl.Kisa likes omelets and but not dry foods, and is a fan of a fictional anime series Mogeta.Tohru Honda, who understands Kisa's distress because she was once bullied herself, helps Kisa to come out of her shell, and Kisa becomes very attached to her, calling her "onee-chan" ("big sister") in both the manga and Japanese language anime, while in the English dubbed anime she calls her "Sissy"
Edited sentence: " When Kisa starts middle school, her classmates harass and ostracize her because of her naturally tawny hair and golden eyes, an effect of her curse, and her shyness.In author's notes, Natsuki Takaya described her as "in competition to be the first or second most beautiful character" and as a "girly-girl.Kisa is a fan of a fictional anime series Mogeta, which she sometimes watches with Tohru.Tohru Honda, who understands Kisa's distress because she was once bullied herself, helps Kisa to come out of her shell, and Kisa becomes very attached to Tohru, calling her "onee-chan" (translated as "big sister" in both the English manga and subtitled anime, as as "Sissy" in the English dubbed anime)