Original sentence: Craigmount High School provides the sporting clubs mentioned above, aswell as chess and debating clubs.The current headmaster is John Campbell.The history department also runs a trip to the WWI trenches in Belgium each year.The music department runs a music tour abroad every few years (locations have included Paris 2000, Brittany 2002, Barcelona 2004, and Austria 2006).With its 1970s architecture, the school was hailed as a marvel of intelligent design, incorporating a large drama theatre and a campus layout with large open spaces between buildings linked with raised corridors
Edited sentence: Craigmount High School prides itself on the wide range of extracurricular activities which it offers to its pupils, ranging from the sporting clubs mentioned above to the chess and debating clubs.Such a range of activities is unique among schools in Edinburgh.The current headmaster is John Campbell, recently recruited to replace the previous headmaster, John Fraser.The history department also runs a very successful trip to the WWI trenches in Belgium each year.The music department runs a music tour abroad every few years (locations have included Paris 2000, Brittany 2002, Barcelona 2004, and Austria 2006) giving students the chance to gain valuable performance skills as well as to develop new friendships and good relationships with teachers.The new building has been heavily criticised by students and teachers alike due to the lack of a drama theatre and space for congregating and teaching in the building.This school is brilliant.With its futuristic 1970s architecture, the school was hailed as a marvel of intelligent design, incorporating a large drama theatre and a campus layout with large open spaces between buildings linked with raised corridors