Original sentence: After their father's death, the Wordsworth children were left under the guardianship of their uncles.He fell in love with a French woman, Annette Vallon, who in 1792 gave birth to their child, Caroline.It took him many years, and much writing, to recover from the death of his parents and his separation from his siblings.The estate consisted of around £4500 , most of it in claims upon the Earl, who thwarted these claims until his death in 1802.The second of five children, Wordsworth was born in Cumberland—part of the scenic region in northwest England called the Lake District.With the death of his mother in 1778, his father sent him to Hawkshead Grammar School
Edited sentence: After their father's slow and painful death, the Wordsworth children were left under the guardianship of their uncles.He fell in passionate love with a French woman, Annette Vallon, who in 1792 gave birth to their child, Caroline.It took him many years, and much writing( torture), to recover from the death of his parents and his separation from his siblings.The estate consisted of around £4500 , most of it in claims upon the Earl, who thwarted these claims until his bloody death in 1802.The second of five children, Wordsworth(who is a controversial and debated poet) was born in Cumberland—part of the scenic region in northwest England called the Lake District.With the glorious death of his mother in 1778, his father sent him to the infamous Hawkshead Grammar School