Original sentence: It is stated in the Book of Exodus that the Israelites encamped at the ''Red Sea following their stay at Elim.The Red Sea station is a unverified station claimed to be near the Red Sea
Edited sentence: Although many Egyptologists have claimed that her foreign policy was mainly peaceful, there is evidence that Hatshepsut led successful military campaigns in Nubia, the Levant, and Syria early in her career.As Hatshepsut reestablished the trade networks that had been disrupted during the Hyksos occupation of Egypt during the Second Intermediate Period, the wealth of Thebes increased.Hatshepsut oversaw the preparations and funding for a mission to the Land of Punt.In the Eighteenth dynasty of Egypt, Elim was the port of the city of Thebes.It is reported that Hatshepsut had these trees planted in the courts of her Deir el Bahari mortuary temple complex.Many trade goods were bought in Punt, notably myrrh, which is said to have been Hatshepsut's favorite fragrance.Most notably, however, the Egyptians returned from the voyage bearing 31 live frankincense trees, the roots of which were carefully kept in baskets for the duration of the voyage.She had the expedition commemorated in relief at Deir el-Bahri, which also is famous for its unflattering depiction of the Queen of the Land of Punt, who appears to have had a genetic trait called steatopygia.The Book of Exodus records that the children of Israel encamped at the Red Sea following their stay at Elim.The Red Sea is the seventh station of the Exodus.The expedition set out in her name with five ships, each measuring 70 feet (21 m) long bearing several sails and accommodating 210 men that included sailors and 30 rowers.The wealth of the Eighteenth Dynasty included the Nub or gold of Nubia which it traded for the Bitumen, Copper, Naptha, Frankincense, Myhr and Juniper oil that were used in the mortuary temples of Karnak.Thebes abundence of gold was made legendary by the discovery of the burial of one of her descendants, Tutankhamun.Thebes, Egypt as the capital of Egypt and its Red Sea Port Elim was where Hatshepsut kept her fleet.This was the first recorded attempt to transplant foreign trees.most of Thebes trade from the 11th Dynasty onward was across the Red Sea to Elat