Original sentence: "  Widely known sex researcher Alfred Kinsey found "There may be some correlation between the frequencies of masturbation and the frequencies of nocturnal dreams.83% of men in the United States will experience nocturnal emissions at some time in their lives.Although men are most widely known for nocturnal emission several famous women such as Stephenie Meyer commonly write stories in the style of fanfiction to commemorate these "Wet Dreams.For males who have experienced nocturnal emissions the mean frequency ranges from 0.36 times per week for single 15 year old males to 0.18 times per week for 40 year old single males.For married males the mean ranges from 0.23 times per week for 19 year old married males to 0.15 times per week for 50 year old married males.In some parts of the world nocturnal emissions are more common; for example, in Indonesia, surveys show that 97% of men experience nocturnal emissions by age 24.Moreover, because no proven physical harm (beyond the inconvenience of cleaning the semen ejaculate) is caused by the event and it is not symptomatic of any underlying problem, it is generally considered inadvisable to undergo any sort of treatment
Edited sentence: 83% of men in the United States will experience nocturnal emissions at some time in their life.For example in Indonesia surveys show that 97% of men experience nocturnal emissions by age twentyfour.For males who have experienced nocturnal emissions the mean frequency ranges from 0.36 times per week for single fifteen-year-old males to 0.18 times per week for fourty-year-old single males.For married males the mean ranges from 0.23 times per week for nineteen-year-old married males to 0.15 times per week for fifty-year-old married males.In some parts of the world nocturnal emissions are more common.Moreover, because no proven physical harm (beyond the inconvenience of cleaning the semen ejaculate) is caused by the event, and it is not symptomatic of any underlying problem, it is generally considered inadvisable to undergo any sort of treatment.Widely known sex researcher Alfred Kinsey found "There may be some correlation between the frequencies of masturbation and the frequencies of nocturnal dreams