Original sentence: Also in 1970, Asbury Theological Seminary professer Robert Lyon founded the Ichthus Music Festival, which is presently the longest running Christian music festival.As the genre of Jesus music gained artists, its followers began to sponsor festivals, mimicing secular events such as Woodstock and Monterey Pop Festival.In similar ways as the the Christian music industry in general, festivals can be drawn away from their central theme and gravitate toward commercialization and mainstream acts in an attempt to draw crowds.Tim Landis went on to found the Creation Festival in 1979, which was designed to appeal the the youth, and has become one of the largest Christian festivals in the United States
Edited sentence: Also in 1970, Asbury Theological Seminary professor Robert Lyon founded the Ichthus Music Festival, which is presently the longest running Christian music festival.As the genre of Jesus music gained artists, its followers began to sponsor festivals, mimicking secular events such as Woodstock and Monterey Pop Festival.In similar ways as the Christian music industry in general, festivals can be drawn away from their central theme and gravitate toward commercialization and mainstream acts in an attempt to draw crowds.Tim Landis went on to found the Creation Festival in 1979, which was designed to appeal the youth, and has become one of the largest Christian festivals in the United States