Original sentence: Many of these examples include Joni Mitchell, Cyndi Lauper, Sheena Easton, Willie Nelson, Joan Osbourne, Rita Coolidge and Rod Stewart whom have all made forays into this once shied upon territory.Since then, traditional pop music has gained the appreciation that it deserved.Singers closely associated with the rock era such as Carly Simon and Ringo Star had released critically acclaimed traditional pop songs prior but failed to garner the commercial sales and public enthusiasm that Ronstadt's three discs with Riddle had
Edited sentence: Many of these examples include Joni Mitchell, Cyndi Lauper, Sheena Easton,Willie Nelson, Joan Osbourne, Rita Coolidge and Rod Stewart whom have all made forays into this once shied upon territory.Since then, Traditional Pop music has gained the appreciation that it deserved.Singers closely associated with the rock era such as Carly Simon and Ringo Star had released critically acclaimed Traditional Pop songs prior but failed to garner the commercial sales and public enthusiasm that Ronstadt's three discs with Riddle had