Original sentence: After the Loyalists were expelled in 1780, John Pencil fled from Tryon County, New York to Canada (present-day Ontario).John Pencil Adult ♂  Shortly after 1780 when the Loyalists were expelled from the Thirteen Coloniesn/a CanadaIn 1778 John Pencil, a Loyalist, caught his brother Henry fleeing with other American Patriots to Monocacy Island, and killed him for treason.Local Natives rescued him the first two times, but seeing him as wicked and cursed for killing his brother, they told him they would not help him a third time
Edited sentence: After the Tories were driven out in 1780, John Pencil moved from Tryon County, New York to Canada (present-day Ontario).John Pencil Adult ♂  Shortly after 1780 when the Tories had been driven out of the coloniesn/a CanadaIn 1778 John Pencil, a Tory, caught his brother Henry fleeing with other Patriots to Monocacy Island, and murdered him as a rebel.The Indians rescued him the first two times, but seeing him as wicked and cursed for killing his brother, they told him they would not help him a third time