Original sentence: The BBC say that hundreds of Palestinian farmers and traders are cut off from their land and means of economic survival, and that that the barrier creates "facts on the ground," imposing a unilateral solution which precludes negotiated agreements in the future.Though the Israeli government maintains these are secondary and unintended effects, many claim that the existence and the purpose of the barrier is to create hardship for Palestinians
Edited sentence: In addition, a number of independent journalists have noted that the barrier has improved conditions for Palestinians in cities like Jenin and Ramallah, since the number of Israel incursions have decreased.Israel's critics say that hundreds of Palestinian farmers and traders are cut off from their land and means of economic survival, and that that the barrier creates "facts on the ground," imposing a unilateral solution which precludes negotiated agreements in the future.Though the Israeli government maintains these are secondary and unintended effects, many claim that the existence and the purpose of the fence is to create hardship for Palestinians