Original sentence: Martin's subsequently published three more novels, WHISPER IN THE DARK, which received a starred review from Publishers Weekly, KILL HER AGAIN, and DOWN AMONG THE DEAD MEN (slated for release in July of 2010)
Edited sentence: Martin's subsequently published three more novels, WHISPER IN THE DARK (which received a starred review from Publishers Weekly), KILL HER AGAIN, and DOWN AMONG THE DEAD MEN (slated for release in July of 2010)