Original sentence: As in the United States on MTV, music videos became more and more important as a marketing tool for bands by the mid 1980s.With the debut of MuchMusic in 1984 and MusiquePlus in 1986, both English and French Canadian musicians had outlets to promote their music through video in Canada
Edited sentence: Music videos became more and more important as a marketing tool for Canadian bands by the mid 1980s, with the debut of MuchMusic in 1984 and MusiquePlus in 1986.Now both English and French Canadian musicians had outlets to promote their music through video in Canada