Original sentence: Another son, Tommy O'Regan, played hockey for Harvard University and is now a stand-up comedian.His son Danny O'Regan was selected 138th overall by the San Jose Sharks in the 2012 NHL Entry Draft and currently plays for the Hartford Wolf Pack in the American Hockey League
Edited sentence: Another son Tommy O'Regan played hockey for Harvard University and is now a successful stand-up comedian.His son Daniel O'Regan was selected 138th overall by the San Jose Sharks in the 2012 NHL Entry Draft and currently plays for the Hartford Wolf Pack in the AHL