Original sentence: She initially refused to accept the position but acquiesced on the condition the position was renamed chairman and that she be allowed to reorganize the state organization.The next year, during Arizona's constitutional convention, a proposal granting woman suffrage was introduced
Edited sentence: She initially refused to accept the position, but acquiesced on the condition the position be renamed chairman, and that she be allowed to reorganize the state organization.The next year, during Arizona's constitutional convention, a proposal granting women's suffrage was introduced