Original sentence: In his essay, The Gap — The Bridge, John Wolfenden, responsible for the Wolfenden Report, states that the dichotomization of intellectual disciplines by educational institutions, specifically collegiate institutions, is the blame for the cavernous communication gap that lies between different specialists of their chosen field
Edited sentence: In his essay, The Gap--The Bridge, John Wolfenden, responsible for the Wolfenden Report, so eloquently states that the dichotomization of intellectual disciplines by educational institutions, specifically collegiate institutions, is the blame for the cavernous communication gap that lies between different specialists of their chosen field