Original sentence: For a while, the surface Cheela struggle to keep the rudiments of civilization, but eventionally a barbarian conquerer arises.The novel is about the life of the Cheela civilization who live on a neutron star named Dragon's Egg, struggling to recover from a disasterous starquake
Edited sentence: For a while, the surface Cheela struggle to keep the rudiments of civilization, but eventually a barbarian conqueror arises.The novel is about the life of the Cheela civilization, creatures who live on a neutron star named Dragon's Egg, struggling to recover from a disastrous starquake