Original sentence: After his rugby career had ended early due to injury, he worked as an investment management consultant in Edinburgh and had 4 children called Max Mollie Jack and Charlie with his ex wife called Hannah.He studied at Napier University
Edited sentence: After his rugby career had ended early due to injury, he worked as an investment management consultant in Edinburgh and had 4 amazing, fabulous children called Max, Mollie, Jack and Charlie.He studied at Napier Univeristy