Original sentence: " Bari critcises the governments stance on how it deals with Islamic extremism, who believes are responsible for creating tensions within the communities, and believes:  One of the examples included remarks by the head of MI5, Jonathan Evans and critcised the governments war on Iraq, described as a "disaster".Bari has appeared in the British media speak about Muslims in Britain, integration and what efforts could be taken to improve and control fundementalism rising among and against Muslims since 9/11 and the July 7 bombings.He also feels that the media is only interested in fundementalist Muslim instead of moderate mainstream Muslims from the community: Bari pointed out that the role of Muslim leaders in the community must change in order to interest the growing younger generation, one of the concerns was the lack of English-speaking imams, "Young Muslims need role models to show them they can play a part in British society
Edited sentence: " Bari criticises the governments stance on how it deals with Islamic extremism, who believes are responsible for creating tensions within the communities, and believes:  One of the examples included remarks by the head of MI5, Jonathan Evans and criticised the governments war on Iraq, described as a "disaster".Bari has appeared in the British media speak about Muslims in Britain, integration and what efforts could be taken to improve and control fundamentalism rising among and against Muslims since 9/11 and the July 7 bombings.He also feels that the media is only interested in fundamentalist Muslim instead of moderate mainstream Muslims from the community: Bari pointed out that the role of Muslim leaders in the community must change in order to interest the growing younger generation, one of the concerns was the lack of English-speaking imams, "Young Muslims need role models to show them they can play a part in British society