Original sentence: On a similar note, Israeli historian Efraim Karsh, in a review of The Great War for Civilisation in Commentary Magazine, accused Fisk of "carelessness" with facts: "It is difficult to turn a page of The Great War for Civilisation without encountering some basic error", quoting as examples of this carelessness a great number of factual mistakes, such as mentioning Jesus' birthplace as Jerusalem, instead of Bethlehem, and placing the death of the Caliph Ali in the 8th century, rather than the 7th.Supporters of Israel in particular accuse Fisk of anti-Israeli bias and sloppy reporting
Edited sentence: Supporters of Israel in particular accuse Fisk of anti-Israeli bias and sloppy reporting: for example, right-wing Israeli historian Efraim Karsh, in a review of The Great War for Civilisation in the neoconservative Commentary Magazine, accused Fisk of "carelessness" with facts: "It is difficult to turn a page of The Great War for Civilisation without encountering some basic error", quoting as examples of this carelessness a great number of factual mistakes, such as mentioning Jesus' birthplace as Jerusalem, instead of Bethlehem, and placing the death of the Caliph Ali in the 8th century, rather than the 7th