Original sentence: In 1993, in an attempt to explain some of the evidence against the steady state theory, he presented a modified version called "quasi-steady state cosmology" (QSS), but the theory did not capture a widely receptive audience.Instead, Hoyle, along with Thomas Gold and Hermann Bondi (with whom he had worked on radar in World War II), argued for the universe as being in a "steady state".Ironically, he is responsible for (disparagingly) coining the term "Big Bang" on a BBC radio program, The Nature of Things while criticizing the theory; the text was published in 1950
Edited sentence: In 1993, in an attempt to explain some of the evidence against the steady state theory, he presented a modified version called "quasi-steady state cosmology" (QSS), but the theory did not capture a significant audience.Instead, Hoyle, along with Thomas Gold and Hermann Bondi (with whom he had worked on radar in World War II), argued for the universe being in a "steady state".Ironically, he is the one responsible for coining the term "Big Bang" in a BBC radio program, The Nature of Things while criticizing the theory; the text was published in 1950