Original sentence: According to the State, he is to be rendered "invisible" and a social outcast for one year.Mitchell Chaplin lives in a world parallel to our and has been found guiltyof "coldness"—of not being friendly or open enough with those around him
Edited sentence: "  But this punishment is not at all what Mitchell envisions that it will be - it is NOT physical invisibility (not being able to be seen at all), but social ostracism.According to the totalitarian State, he is to be rendered "invisible"for one year.Mitchell Chaplin is to be seen yet DELIBERATELY avoided and shunned.Mitchell Chaplin lives in a world parallel to our and has been found guilt yof "coldness"—of not being friendly or open enough with those around him