Original sentence: In August 2006, they announced changes in eligibility requirements for application to the FDNY and a recruiting drive intended to boost diversity by changing entrance requirements.Of the FDNY's 11,600 uniformed members, there are about 620 Hispanics, or 5.4%, and about 330 blacks - fewer than 3%.The FDNY has been trying to recruit ethnic minorities and women to join it for years, department officials have recently stepped up efforts to make it easier for minorities to pass the entrance examination.The department has 30 women members and about 70 Asians.The federal government, is investigating the FDNY for possible discrimination in its hiring practises
Edited sentence: Despite the fact that the FDNY has been aggressively trying to entice minorities and women to join the Department for years, Fire Department officials have recently stepped up efforts to make it even easier for minorities to pass the entrance examination.In August 2006, they announced changes in eligibility requirements for application to the department and an aggressive recruiting drive intended to boost diversity by lowering entrance standards.Of the FDNY's 11,600 uniformed members, there are about 620 Hispanics, or 5.4%, and about 330 blacks -- fewer than 3%.The department has just 30 women members and about 70 Asians.The federal government, yet again, is investigating the FDNY for possible discrimination in its hiring practices