Original sentence: Ji-hyun's excitement is muted when she makes an significant discovery that reveals the deception around her.She painfully realizes her life was less than perfect, and that it won't be as easy Fto find people who truly love her
Edited sentence: Ji-hyun's excitement is muted when she makes an earth-shattering discovery that opens her eyes to the deception around her.She soon realizes with painful clarity that her life was not so perfect after all and that it won't be as easy to find people who truly love her