Original sentence: After a few years in advertising, he read an MBA degree at Columbia Business School, graduating in 1984.As a result of a project paper, he, with a few young colleagues, founded one of the first two pay-television services outside of the US.Bekker attended Hoër Volkskool Heidelberg and completed degrees at Stellenbosch University, in Law and Literature, and at Wits University, in Law.During his studies in Stellenbosch, he was a hostel boarder of Eendrag Manskoshuis.Jacobus Petrus "Koos" Bekker (born 14 December 1952) is chairman of emerging markets media group Naspers.M-Net and its sister companies, such as Multichoice, eventually expanded to 48 countries across Africa.The company operates in 130 countries, is listed on the London and Johannesburg Stock Exchanges, and has the largest market capitalization of any media company outside the US and China.The group conducts business in  Europe, Africa, Latin America, China, India, Russia, and various smaller countries
Edited sentence: After a few years in advertising he read an MBA degree at Columbia Business School, graduating in 1984.As a result of a project paper, he, and a few young colleagues founded one of the first two pay television services outside the US.Bekker received his school education from Hoër Volkskool Heidelberg and completed degrees from Stellenbosch University in Law and Literature and Wits University in Law.During his studies in Stellenbosch he was a hostel boarder of Eendrag Manskoshuis.Geographically the group spans Europe, Africa, Latin America, China, India, Russia and various smaller countries.Jacobus Petrus "Koos" Bekker (born 14 December 1952) is chairman of leading emerging markets media group Naspers.M-Net and its sister companies like Multichoice eventually expanded to 48 countries across Africa.The company operates in 130 countries and is listed on the London and Johannesburg Stock Exchanges, and has the largest market capitalization of any media company outside the US and China