Original sentence: Nyro possessed an instinctive sense of song arrangement and vocal arrangement skills, which revealed itself not only in her own material, but in her recordings of, as she called them, “the teenage heartbeat songs of my youth” and the occasional pop standard.Nyro was reportedly uncomfortable with attempts to mass-market her as a celebrity and, frustrated with a record industry becoming increasingly driven by commerce, Nyro announced her retirement from the music business at the age of 24.She possessed a voice which could register tenderness, rage, and playfulness with equal ability.This was the same disease that claimed the life of her own mother, Gilda Nigro, who also was 49 at the time of her death
Edited sentence: In a sad coincidence, this was the same disease that claimed the life of her own mother, Gilda Nigro, who also was 49 at the time of her death.Nyro was also blessed with an instinctive sense of song arrangement and vocal arrangement skills, which revealed itself not only in her own material, but in her recordings of, as she called them, “the teenage heartbeat songs of my youth” and the occasional pop standard.She possessed a beautiful, angelic voice which could register tenderness, rage, and playfulness with equal ability.The fundamentally shy Nyro was reportedly uncomfortable with attempts to mass-market her as a celebrity and, frustrated with a record industry becoming increasingly driven by commerce, Nyro announced her retirement from the music business at the age of 24