Original sentence: At Sid's cafe, Del talks about the time he first met a woman at a betting shop in Lewisham Grove when Del was younger.Del finally phones Raquel, apologizes to her, and promises that he'll stop drinking and gambling from now on, though Raquel will still allow Del to the Nag's Head on weekends, as long as he brings her with him just to socialize.Del looks shocked that it was Marlene, and Trigger is about say that it was Marlene but Denzil interupts Trigger to stop him from revealing that Del was seeing Marlene when they were teenagers.Del walks home drunk from too much champagne, and decides to sing "One Voice, Singing in the Darkness", which wakes up the whole neighborhood.Raquel explains that she's finally had enough of Del ignoring her, so she and Damien are staying at Rodney's place until Del apologizes.The next day at the Nag's Head, Del enters, and Rodney berates him for not phoning Raquel and apologizing to her
Edited sentence: At Sid's café, Del talks about the time he first met a woman at a betting shop in Lewisham Grove when Del was younger.Del finally phones Raquel, apologises to her, and promises that he'll stop drinking and gambling from now on, though Raquel will still allow Del to the Nag's Head on weekends, as long as he brings her with him just to socialise.Del looks shocked that it was Marlene, and Trigger is about say that it was Marlene but Denzil interrupts Trigger to stop him from revealing that Del was seeing Marlene when they were teenagers.Del walks home drunk from too much champagne, and decides to sing "One Voice, Singing in the Darkness", which wakes up the whole neighbourhood.Raquel explains that she's finally had enough of Del ignoring her, so she and Damien are staying at Rodney's place until Del apologises.The next day at the Nag's Head, Del enters, and Rodney berates him for not phoning Raquel and apologising to her