Original sentence: "  His insistence on the band uniform of bowl haircut, leather jacket and white tennis shoes grated on some members, but his authoritarian style ultimately served to focus the Ramones.Alongside his music career, he appeared in nearly a dozen movies (including Rock and Roll High School) and documentaries.Embittered, the two would not speak to each other for the rest of the band's career.Johnny Ramone refused to call his former bandmate Joey, even when Joey was dying of cancer.Johnny's hardcore attitude seems to have been balanced out by Joey's love for bubblegum pop, surf rock, love songs, and lefty political subversion.This does not serve him well in the interviews he conducted after Joey's death, when he speaks of Joey as though he were an abstract idea
Edited sentence: "  His insistence on the band uniform of bowl haircut, leather jacket and white tennis shoes grated on some members, but his political views were obviously founded in some quasi-fascistic spirit that ultimately served to focus the Ramones.Alongside his music career, he appeard in nearly a dozen movies (including Rock and Roll High School) and documentaries.Embittered, the two would not speak to each other for the rest of the band's career, and Johnny Ramone refused to call his former bandmate Joey, even when Joey was dying of cancer.Johnny's focus seems to have been balanced out by Joey's talents and love for bubblegum pop, surf rock, love songs, and lefty political subversion, thus the success of Johnny's direction seems somewhat accidental, versus Joey's input.This does not serve him well in the interviews he conducted after Joey's death, when he speaks of Joey as though he were an abstracted idea