Original sentence: Erin Pizzey criticised the views expressed by Harman and other leading female Labour figures in the 1990 IPPR report "The Family Way".Harman has received criticism for her perceived negative views of fathers and dislike of families particularly from the right wing and conservative press.In contrast, others have stated that some of "The Family Way's" stated goals were "the formation of strong, loving and lasting bonds between fathers and their children", and the encouragement of men to assume more responsibility for their children and partners, with a focus on "inter-dependence" in family relationships as opposed to women's "independence.Writing in the Daily Mail, she accused the report of being a "staggering attack on men and their role in modern life" as a result of her stating "it cannot be assumed that men are bound to be an asset to family life or that the presence of fathers in families is necessarily a means to social cohesion"
Edited sentence: " Erin Pizzey disagreed with the report, writing in the Daily Mail, she accused the report of being a "staggering attack on men and their role in modern life" as a result of the report stating "it cannot be assumed that men are bound to be an asset to family life or that the presence of fathers in families is necessarily a means to social cohesion".Harmen was involved with  other leading female Labour figures in the creation of the 1990 IPPR report "The Family Way".The stated goals of the report were "the formation of strong, loving and lasting bonds between fathers and their children",The objective of the report was  to encourage men to assume more responsibility for their children and partners, with a focus on "inter-dependence" in family relationships as opposed to women's "independence