Original sentence: In the olden days Japanese women used to wear kimonos, but as the country developed and now found to be in the fifth stage of the demographic transition model, with it women also developed and became individual successful buisnesswomen whom dress to impress to work but with the high touch of fashion
Edited sentence: In the olden days women used to wear kimonos, but as the country developed and now found to be in the fifth stage of the demographic transition model, with it women also developed and became individual successful buisnesswomen whom dress to impress to work but with the high touch of fashion.Japanese women especialy are well known to be very fashionable with their unique, special and fabulous style they capture the world