Original sentence: Exmaples from popular music include Elvis Presley, credited with popularizing "black music" with white audiences, as well as Eminem's popularity as a rap singer.It explains such phenomena as Caucasian boxer, Gerry Cooney, receiving an very large amount of money for his 1982 fight with African American Larry Holmes, even though he was an untested contender
Edited sentence: It explains such phenomena as caucasian boxer Gerry Cooney receiving an exorbitant amount of money for his 1982 fight with Larry Holmes even though he was an untested contender as well as Eminem's vast popularity and accolades (going so far as to win an Oscar) while having but a slight modicum of actual rapping ability