Original sentence: In September, 2003, Point Pleasant Park was devastated by Hurricane Juan.It once hosted a military battery, and ruins of eighteenth century Martello tower can be found there.Point Pleasant Park is a large, forested area at the southern tip of Halifax peninsula.Shakespearean plays are performed in the park every summer by the Shakespeare by the Sea theatre company.The park is a popular recreational spot for Haligonians, as it hosts excellent forest walks and beautiful views across the harbour and out toward the Atlantic.The park is still officially owned by the British government, but the Halifax Regional Municipality pays a nominal rent of £1 per year.While there are still trees remaining, the park now has a very thin canopy
Edited sentence: Every summer Shakespearean plays are performed in the park by the Shakespeare by the Sea theatre company.In September, 2003, Point Pleasant Park was devastated by Hurricane Juan, which swept in from the Atlantic.It was formerly a military battery, and ruins of eighteenth century Martello tower can be found there.Point Pleasant Park is a large, forested area at the southermost tip of the peninsula on which the city of Halifax, Nova Scotia is built.The park is a popular spot for Haligonians to relax in, as it has excellent forest walks and beautiful views across the harbour and out toward the Atlantic.The park is still technically owned by the British government - the Halifax Regional Municipality pays a nominal rent of £1 per year.While there are still many trees remaining, the park now has a ghostly, post-apocalyptic appearance, and it will be many years before it regains its former beauty