Original sentence: Converted in July of 1904, he received his education at Kentucky State University and Asbury College, then did graduate work for a master's degree at Boston University while principal of the Pentecostal Collegiate Institute
Edited sentence: Converted in July of 1904, he received his education at Kentucky State University and Asbury College (graduating from the latter in 1907), then did graduate work for a master's degree at Boston University while principal of the Pentecostal Collegiate Institute