Original sentence: Neda, a young Iranian woman killed by government forces on June 20, 2009
Edited sentence: Neda, a young Iranian woman killed by government forces on June 20, 2009 as she was standing with her father on the streets of Teheran, innocently watching growing protests by the populace against the declaration of Ahmedinijad as the winner of the elections.The people of Iran refuse, as this is being written, to accept the election result amid allegations of widespread rigging and fraud.The poignant video of Neda's horrific death in a matter of minutes as her father desperately tries to comfort and revive her has served as an inspiration to many in the streets of Teheran who claim her variously to be the "voice" or the "call" of freedom, or the "voice" of Iran