Original sentence: Homicide rates as a whole, especially homicides as a result of firearms use, are significantly lower in many other developed countries.This is especially apparent in the UK and Japan, which have very strict gun control, however it is equally true in countries with little gun regulation, such as Canada and Switzerland
Edited sentence: Homicide rates as a whole, and especially homicides as a result of firearms use; are significantly lower in all other developed countries.This is especially apparent in the UK and Japan, which have very strict gun control