Original sentence: Smith and Mosier met at the Vancouver Film School in Canada.Smith left four months into the eighth month program the two were attending and made a deal with Mosier: the two would start writing a script of their own and the one who finished last would help the other with his movie.Smith thought Mosier was "a 90210 kid,"  but after having conversations with Mosier at the film school the two became friends.Their first assignment, Mae Day, was a student film documentary that fell apart in production.They also added a segment in which the two were shown in silouette as they described their fictional thoughts.To fix it, Smith and Mosier decided to get interviews from the crew on how they thought it was going
Edited sentence: After having conversations with Mosier at the film school, the two became friends for life.At first glance, Smith thought Mosier was "a 90210 kid.Guess who finish first.If one finish before the other, the other would help him with his flick.Kevin and Scott both met at the Vancouver Film School in Canada.Kevin left 4 months into the 8 month program the two were attending and made a deal with Scott: the two would start writing a script of their own.Their first assignment, Mae Day, was a student film documentary that fell apart in production, so Kevin and Mosier decided to get interviews from the crew on Mae about what they thought personally about how it was going and added segment in which the two where shown in silouette and decribed their fictional thoughts