Original sentence: After working tirelessly, she finished the dress for Mrs.Berret to petition for a license for Elizabeth, and upon her request granted her not only the license, but granted it free of charge.Keckly attempted to politely decline the work due her already heavy order commitments.Keckly found most of her work with the women of society by word of mouth recommendations, and after completing several dresses, she came upon a commission that she almost let go.McClean called for Keckly and instructed her to go to the Lincolns' suite, where her presence had been requested by Mrs.With her new license, she was able to concentrate on networking and supporting herself more closely
Edited sentence: After working tirelessly, Keckly finished the dress for Mrs.Berret to petition for a license for Elizabeth; upon her request Berrett not only granted her the license, but granted it free of charge.Keckly attempted to politely decline the work, because of her already heavy order commitments.Keckly found most of her work with the women of society by word-of-mouth recommendations; after completing several dresses, she came upon a commission that she almost let go.McLean called for Keckly and instructed her to go to the Lincolns' suite, where her presence had been requested by Mrs.With her new license, she was able to concentrate more closely on networking and supporting herself