Original sentence: A homosexual student at Stanford University named Harry Hay became involved in labor activism in the 1930s, crediting the longshoreman's waterfront strike with sparking his interest in communism.A year later, after an announcement that a new police recruitment drive would target the gay community, similar plans formed targeting Mayor Moscone.Finding radical left organizations unwelcoming or indifferent to homosexuals, Hay conceived of an activist group to champion their rights.Gain, whose conciliatory position towards African Americans had branded him as one of the most liberal law enforcement officers in the country, soon earned the ire of the predominantly Irish-Catholic police force.His lenient policies towards gay people also enraged the police force.Police reinforcements suddenly appeared on the street, keeping their badge numbers hidden, and severely beat dozens of gay men.Theatrical female impersonators were common and worked in legitimate stage shows
Edited sentence: A year later, similar plans formed targeting Mayor Moscone.Gain, whose conciliatory position towards African Americans had branded him as one of the most liberal law enforcement officers in the country, soon earned the ire of the predominantly Irish Catholic police force.His lenient policies towards gays also angered the police force.Police reinforcements suddenly appeared on the street, keeping their badge numbers hidden, and beat dozens of gay men