Original sentence: Noteworthy changes were made in the more contemporary Rent: Mimi's disease was brought up to date from tuberculosis to AIDS, while Roger (Rodolfo), Angel (Schaunard) and Collins are also sick with Aids; Angel  becomes a cross dresser and forms a gay couple with Collins (Colline); Joanne (Alcindoro) becomes a female lawyer, and consequentally forms a lesbian relationship with Maureen (Musetta), a relationship that is more defined in Rent; Angel dies of Aids in Rent, the loss causing strife among the group and nurturing an old fatalist opinion in Roger; and in the end, Mimi does not die but comes very close
Edited sentence: Post-modern perversions of the story line were made in the more contemporary Rent: Mimi's disease was brought up to date from tuberculosis to AIDS, while Roger (Rodolfo), Angel (Schaunard) and Collins are also sick with Aids; Angel  becomes a cross dresser and forms a gay couple with Collins (Colline); Joanne (Alcindoro) becomes a female lawyer, and consequentally forms a lesbian relationship with Maureen (Musetta), a relationship that is more defined in Rent; Angel dies of Aids in Rent, the loss causing strife among the group and nurturing an old fatalist opinion in Roger; and in the end, Mimi does not die but comes very close