Original sentence: Margarets is bounded by the Moor Mead Park, which lies adjacent to the River Crane.This popular public open space is home to the annual St Margarets Fair, which takes place each July
Edited sentence: Margarets is bounded by the graceful Moor Mead Park, which lies adjacent to the River Crane.The park is also home to the annual St Margarets Fair, which takes place each July.This popular open space is shared by football and cricket players, joggers, dog walkers, picknickers and children enjoying the recently refurbished playground