Original sentence: He enlisted in the US Cavalry at 20 and two years after an honorable discharge, he married his first wife, Charlotte Dyer.He involved himself in local community affairs, including the job of tax collector* from 1873 to 1876
Edited sentence: He enlisted in the US Cavalry at 20 and two years later received an honorable discharge, he married his first wife, Charlotte Dyer.He involved himself in local community affairs, including the job of tax collector from 1873 to 1876