Original sentence: Finding affordable housing affects a large portion of the city’s population including low-income, moderate-income, and even median income families.New York City attracts thousands of new residents each year and housing prices continue to climb.New York City has a shortage of affordable housing resulting in overcrowding and homelessness
Edited sentence: As a result, housing prices continue to climb.Finding affordable housing in New York City is a struggle for a large portion of the city’s population including low-income, moderate-income, and even median income families.New York City is a highly desirable place to live, attracting thousands of new residents each year, and faces water and public transportation constraints.New York City suffers from a shortage of affordable housing