Original sentence: Although rare, ironically some of the adult-onset hikikomori people have succeeded in becoming extremely wealthy and in achieving financial freedom, in contrast to their more conformist salaryman counterparts.One of the most prominent cases of an isolated trader who lived in his parents home is the Japanese individual who traded the JASDAQ Securities Exchange with 1 million yen (apr.Starting in 2003 he managed to exponentially grow his account 10,000 fold in three years up to 10 billion yen (apr
Edited sentence: Although rare and ironical, some of the adult-onset hikikomori people succeed in becoming extremely wealthy and in achieving financial freedom contrast to their enslaved conformist salaried-man counterparts.One of the prominent case of an isolated trader who lived in his parents home is the Japanese individual who traded the JASDAQ Securities Exchange with 1 million yen (apr.Starting in 2003 he managed to exponentially grow his account by an amazing 10,000 folds in three years up to 10 billion yen (apr