Original sentence: He is a Toronto Sun columnist and a 10 year panelist on the current affairs TV program The Michael Coren Show.He rose rapidly through the ranks to become the president of Ontario's largest trade union.He was born in Crumlin, a working class area on Dublin's south side where most of his family still lives.He was instrumental in helping to unionize his first Canadian employer, Curity Products, for the United Steelworks of America (USWA).In 1976, he joined Ontario Hydro and began his career in the Canadian Union of Public Employees (CUPE).Ryan has aggressively pursued a media strategy since taking over in 1992.Ryan has held the presidency since 1992 and is the longest serving president in the union's history
Edited sentence: He is a Toronto Sun columnist and a 10 year panelist on the current affairs TV program the Michael Coren Show.He is an articulate spokesperson and a charismatic speaker at rallies and political events.He was born in Crumlin a working class area on Dublin's south side where most of his family still live.He was instruemental in helping to unioniize his first Canadian employer  Curity Products for the United Steelworks of America (USWA).In 1976, he joined Ontario Hydro and began his career in the Canadian Union of Public Employees (CUPE) He rose rapidly through the ranks to eventually become the president of Ontario's largest trade union.Ryan has held the presidency since 1992 - the longest serving president in the unions history.Ryan has raised the profile of his union by agressively pursuing a media strategy since taking over in 1992