Original sentence: " Arbuthnot, for example, painted a clear picture of how filibusters from Georgia incited the war by settling on Spanish and Seminole lands in Florida, while launching raids into the colony for cattle and slaves." Jackson's men found the letter and other papers when they attacked the Suwannee.A trader from Montrose, Scotland born 1748.Arbuthnot had a store near St Augustine on the Spanish/Florida border; its exact location is unknown and the area has now been greatly developed.Emigrated to Florida in 1803 to trade with the Seminole Indians and represent their cause to the English.Historian John Mahon stated that they threw, "some doubt on the official American position that the cause of the trouble rested solely on the Indians and their European abettors
Edited sentence: " Arbuthnot, for example, painted a clear (and we now know credible) picture of how filibusters from Georgia incited the war by settling on Spanish and Seminole lands in Florida, while launching raids into the colony for cattle and slaves." Unfortunately for Arbuthnot, Jackson's men found the letter and other papers when they attacked the Suwannee.A trader from Montrose born 1748.Emigrated to Florida 1803 to trade with the Seminole Indians and represent their cause to the English.He had a store near St Augustine on the Spanish/Florida border; its exact location is unknown and the area has been greatly developed.They threw, in the delicate phrasing of historian John Mahon, "some doubt on the official American position that the cause of the trouble rested solely on the Indians and their European abettors