Original sentence: Increasing western demand for cocaine causes several hundred thousand people to be displaced from their homes every year, indigenous people are enslaved to produce cocaine and people are killed by the land mines drug cartels place to protect their coca crops.The illegality of drugs in itself may also cause social and economic consequences for those using them, and legal regulation of drug production and distribution could alleviate these and other dangers of illegal drug use
Edited sentence: Increasing western demand for cocaine causes several hundred thousand people to be displaced from their homes every year, indigenous people are enslaved to produce cocaine and children are killed by the land mines drug cartels place to protect their coca crops.The illegality of drugs in itself may also cause social and economic consequences for those using them, and legal regulation of drug production and distribution would alleviate these and other dangers of illegal drug use