Original sentence: He lives in Capel Curig, Snowdonia.His working life was spent as a lecturer in engineering at Bangor University, but he is best known for his outside achievements.Owen Wyn Owen is an automobile restorer and mechanic.The car was indeed in appalling condition.The mechanical running gear though was in good condition
Edited sentence: He still lives in Capel Curig, Snowdonia.His working life was spent as a lecturer in engineering at Bangor University, but he is best known for his achievements outside this.Owen Wyn Owen is a world famous automobile restorer and mechanic.The car was indeed in appalling condition, although better than had been expected.The mechanical running gear though was in surprisingly good condition