Original sentence: The crowd was assembled in the Jallianwala Bagh, an enclosure of 2.4–2.8 ha (6–7 acres) in the centre of the city, participating in a banned political rally protesting against the Rowlatt Acts.The crowd was unable to comply with commands to disperse.This single incident incensed the Nobel Laureate Rabindranath Tagore so much that he renounced his knighthood
Edited sentence: As per tradition, the crowd had gathered, unarmed, simply as a celebration of their peaceful religion.He later showed no remorse whatsoever for the murders of the unarmed men, women and children, including a six-month old baby.In addition, based on Dyer's own testimony, it should be noted that the crowd was not even given the chance to disperse.The crowd was assembled in the Jallianwala Bagh, an enclosure of 2.4–2.8 ha (6–7 acres) in the centre of the city, participating in a religious celebration, Baisakhi Day.The crowd was unable to disperse because the only open entrance/exit to the park had been blocked by the soldiers and two tanks, on which machine guns were mounted.This abominable single incident incensed the Nobel Laureate Rabindranath Tagore so much that he renounced his knighthood.Without warning, as soon as Dyer entered the park, he opened fire