Original sentence: A considerable majority of the people of Scotland share a Scottish national identity, usually with considerable pride in their nation, its history and with the achievements of their countrymen including those who have emigrated and their descendants.Some parts of Scotland, like Orkney and Shetland retain a strong sense of regional identity alongside the idea of a Scottish national identity
Edited sentence: A considerable majority of the people of Scotland share a Scottish national identity (exceptions include many inhabitants of Orkney and Shetland), usually with considerable pride in their nation, its history and with the achievements of their countrymen including those who have emigrated and their descendants