Original sentence: Holly Sorensen at.Holly Sorensen now lives in Los Angeles with her family and works as an Executive Producer on MAKE IT OR BREAK IT, which premiered on ABC Family June 22, 2009 with 2.5 million viewers.Holly Sorensen was born and raised in Montana, and was given scholarships to The Annie Wright School in Washington State and Dartmouth college, where she studied philosophy and film.Holly simultaneously started a career as a screenwriter, writing for major studios and production companies, and selling four pilots before having MAKE IT OR BREAK IT produced in late 2008 and going to series, airing in 2009.Holly was the Senior Editor for Premiere Magazine and has written for Us, In Style, O, and many other publications.It was after a meeting with the ABC Family management team did the idea for MAKE IT OR BREAK IT - previously PERFECT 10 - really crystallize.MAKE IT OR BREAK IT came about after Holly had been exploring ideas of teens with careers.Make It Or Break It at.She liked the idea of pre-Olympic trainees, and fresh off the heals of the 2008 U.women's gymnastic performance at the 2008 Summer Games, ABC Family liked it too
Edited sentence: Holly Sorensen is an American film producer and screenwriter.Holly Sorensen now lives in Los Angeles with her family and works as an Executive Producer on Make It or Break It, which premiered on ABC Family June 22, 2009 with 2.5 million viewers.Holly Sorensen was born and raised in Montana, and was given scholarships to the Annie Wright School in Tacoma, Washington and Dartmouth College, where she studied philosophy and film.Holly simultaneously started a career as a screenwriter, writing for major studios and production companies, and selling four pilots before having Make It or Break It produced in late 2008 and going to series, airing in 2009.Holly was the Senior Editor for Premiere and has written for Us Weekly, InStyle, O, and many other publications