Original sentence: Canada finally achieved independence from Britain when it took control of its own diplomatic and military affairs in the 1920s.In World War II, the United States built large military bases in Newfoundland (then still a British colony), and the business community there sought closer ties with the United States as expressed by the Economic Union Party.Ottawa took notice and wanted Newfoundland to join Canada, which it did after hotly contested referendums
Edited sentence: Canada demanded and received permission to send its own delegation to the Versailles Peace Talks in 1919, with the proviso that it sign the treaty under the British Empire.Canada subsequently responsibility for its own foreign and military affairs in the 1920's.In World War II, the United States built large military bases in the Dominion of Newfoundland (which did not join Canada until 1949 and was under direct British rule at the time), and the business community there sought closer ties with the United States as expressed by the Economic Union Party.Ottawa took notice and wanted Newfoundland to join Canada, which it did after hotly contested referenda