Original sentence: Wildlife along the River Kelvin corridor includes the grey squirrel, magpie, grey heron, cormorant, blue tit, great tit, chaffinch,snipe,great spotted woodpecker,blackbird, redwing, carrion crow,  kingfisher, mallard, goosander, roe deer, red fox,otter, water vole, mink, and brown rat
Edited sentence: Wildlife along the River Kelvin corridor includes the grey squirrel, magpie, grey heron, cormorant, blue tit, great tit, chaffinch, snipe, great spotted woodpecker,blackbird, redwing, carrion crow,  kingfisher, mallard, goosander, roe deer, red fox, otter, water vole, mink, and brown rat