Original sentence: His fellows took revenge and killed the Muslim man.Islamic tradition says that in the year 624, when a Muslim woman came to the shop of a Banu Qaynuqa goldsmith, the goldsmith played a prank on her.She screamed, and a Muslim man killed him
Edited sentence: In the year 624, when a Muslim woman came to the shop of a Banu Qaynuqa goldsmith, while she was sitting in negotiations, the goldsmith lusted after her body and begged her to show him her face and body.She denied this and was creeped out by his disgusting behaviour.The jews drew their swords murdered the Muslim man.Unbeknownst to Her, one of the jews pinned the lower part of her dress to the upper part while she sat.When she stood up her body was revealed and She screamed, a neaby Muslim man saw what happened and rushed to defend her