Original sentence: Nealan, (Neal), the oldest page in the history of pages, becomes her best friend as well as her sponser, and the other first-year pages gradually accept her as she defends them from the bullies.When Kel is getting ready for the midwinter feast, she receives surprise gifts of a new dagger and a whetstone for sharpening of incredibly high quality, which, at that time, were unaffordable except by people who were one of the higher classes
Edited sentence: At midwinter feast time, she also receives a powerful bruise balm from a mysterious gift-giver.Nealan, (Neal), one of the oldest page in the history of pages, becomes her best friend as well as her sponser, and the other first-year pages gradually accept her as she defends them from the bullies.When Kel is getting ready for her first day of training, she receives a surprise gift of a new dagger and a whetstone for sharpening of incredibly high quality, which, at that time, were unaffordable except by people who were one of the higher classes