Original sentence: " This type of violence is frequently invisible since it happens behind closed doors, and is not treated as a crime by legal systems and cultural norms, but rather as a "private" family matter, or a normal part of life World Health Organisation (2005).Attitudes can change, the status of women canbe improved, and men and women can be convinced that partner violence is not an acceptable part of human relationships.Its cost to individuals, to health systems, and to society in general is enormous, yet no other major problem of public health has – until relatively recently – been so widely ignored and so little understood.The Study clearly demonstrates that violence against women is widespread and deeply ingrained, and has serious impacts on women’s health and well-being.World Health Organisation (2005)
Edited sentence: Attitudes can and must change; the status of women can and must be improved; men and women can and must be convinced that partner violence is not an acceptable part of human relationships World Health Organisation (2005).Its continued existence is morally indefensible; its cost to individuals, to health systems, and to society in general is enormous.The Study clearly demonstrates, violence against women is widespread and deeply ingrained, and has serious impacts on women’s health and well-being.Yet no other major problem of public health has – until relatively recently – been so widely ignored and so little understood.” This type of violence is frequently invisible since it happens behind closed doors, and effectively, when legal systems and cultural norms do not treat as a crime, but rather as a "private" family matter, or a normal part of life World Health Organisation (2005)