Original sentence: Artists who made significant contributions during this period include Vito Acconci, Sol Lewitt, Dan Graham, Eric Fischl, Lawrence Weiner, Joseph Beuys and Claes Oldenburg.He invited notable artists to come to NSCAD as visiting artists, particularly those involved in conceptual art.In 1967, the artist Garry Kennedy was appointed President, and he immediately moved to remake the College from a provincial art school into an international centre for artistic activity
Edited sentence: He invited many "art stars" to come to NSCAD as visiting artists, particularly those involved in conceptual art.In 1967, a young artist named Garry Kennedy was appointed President, and he immediately moved to remake the College from a sleepy provincial art school into an international hotbed of artistic activity.Some the notables who made significant contributions during this period were Vito Acconci, Sol Lewitt, Dan Graham, Eric Fischl, Lawrence Weiner, Joseph Beuys and Claes Oldenburg and many more artists popular at that time