Original sentence: After William Penn Patrick bought Mind Dynamics in 1970, the Leadership Dynamics coursework became popular in the United States, Europe, and Australia.Ben Gay, a high-level instructor at Leadership Dynamics, and President of Holiday Magic (USA), stated that Leadership Dynamics was a separate company, "..in no way related to Holiday Magic, Inc.Distributors who had attained the levels Instructor General, Trainer General, and Senior General at Holiday Magic were required to take part in the Leadership Dynamics training.However, Patrick's businesses became involved in pyramid schemes, and Leadership Dynamics, Holiday Magic, and Mind Dynamics all shut down in 1973.In his book, Gene Church noted inconsistencies in this statement, and pointed out that the several individuals held positions (or ownership) in both Holiday Magic and Leadership Dynamics..
Edited sentence: ", author Gene Church pointed out many inconsistencies in this statement.According to a lawsuit brought against Holiday Magic by the Securities and Exchange Commission, in order to advance to the positions of Instructor General, Trainer General, and Senior General within the company, employees were mandated to take part in the Leadership Dynamics training.Ben Gay, a high-level instructor at Leadership Dynamics, was President of Holiday Magic in the United States.However, Patrick's businesses became involved in pyramid schemes, and Leadership Dynamics, Holiday Magic, and Mind Dynamics shut down in 1973.In 1970, William Penn Patrick bought Mind Dynamics, and the Leadership Dynamics coursework soon became popular in the United States, Europe, and Australia.Though he claimed Leadership Dynamics was a separate company, "..in no way related to Holiday Magic, Inc