Original sentence: However, instead of the anxiety focusing on a fear of embarrassing themselves or being judged by other people because of their social ineptness (as in cases in the Western world), sufferers of taijin kyofusho instead report a fear of hurting or offending other people; the focus is thus on avoiding harm to others rather than to oneself
Edited sentence: However, instead of the anxiety focusing on a fear of embarrassing themselves or being judged by other people because of their social ineptness (as in cases in the Western world), sufferers of taijin kyofusho instead display a fear of hurting or offending other people; the focus is thus on avoiding harm to others rather than to oneself