Original sentence: Alexander's army had crossed the Hellespont with about 40,000 soldiers, which primarily consisted of Macedonians and Greeks, but also included barbarian peoples such as the Thracians, Paionians and Illyrians
Edited sentence: Alexander's army had crossed the Hellespont with about 40,000 soldiers, which primarily consisted of Hellenic peoples (Greco-Macedonians) but with the presence of few barbaric ones (Thracians, Paionians, and Illyrians)