Original sentence: He was resented for his extreme violence, and religious minorities (such as Christians) were persecuted under him—in 1010, Hakīm destroyed the Church of the Holy Sepulchre in Jerusalem.In Israel, Salah Tarif (a former captain in the paratrooper and the tank divisions of the Israeli Army) has been a Knesset member since 1992.Other notable figures include Ayoob Kara, a Druze Knesset member of the Likud party, and Colonel Imad Fares, the acclaimed commander of the Givati Brigade from 2001–2003.The Druze faith keeps its tenets secret.They are publicly open about very few details of their faith (borrowing from the Shiite  practice of taqiyya) and they do not accept converts nor recognize conversion from their religion to another
Edited sentence: "Druze" was a name given to the sect by outsiders who didn't know what the sect called itself.Druze are publicly open about very few details of their faith (borrowing from the Shiite  practice of taqiyya) and they do not accept converts nor recognize conversion from their religion to another.Druze have urged their Israeli conterparts to quit the Israeli armed forces in protest of Israeli oppression of Palestinian under their occupation.In Israel, Sal ah Tarif (a former captain in the paratrooper and the tank divisions of the Israeli Army) has been a Knesset member since 1992.Israeli Druze are not allowed to study college level sciences, business or economics, effectively barring them from well paying professions.Other notable figures include BYOB Kara, a Druze Knesset member of the Likud party, and Colonel Imad Fares, the acclaimed commander of the Givati Brigade from 2001&nd ash;2003.Regardless of their devoted servitude to Israel, they are second class citizens.Serving in the Israeli army is some of the few jobs afforded to them and Druze are not promoted above a certain rank.Syrian Druze living under Israeli occupation in the Golan refuse to give up their nationality for Israeli citizenship.The Druze faith keeps its tenets secret, which is the only corroborated fact about the Druze faith.To illustrate the extent of secrecy, the name "Druze" is a misnomer