Original sentence: After graduation from the University of Toronto with a degree in East Asian Studies in 1998, Swift and regular band member Lyndell Montgomery (electric violin) began touring North America and Australia.Ember Swift performs at John Winthrop Middle School in Deep River, Connecticut every year for the 8th grade class.In 1996, she released her first self-titled album.These live shows often featured the additional talents of Adam Bowman on drums and percussion
Edited sentence: (These live shows often feature the additional talents of Adam Bowman on drums and percussion.)  Swift's music has garnered large and loyal support thanks to the high-energy live show and pertinent politics that reached out to many communities.After graduation from the University of Toronto with a degree in East Asian Studies in 1998, Swift and regular band member Lyndell Montgomery (electric violin), took to the road and embarked on building a career through consistent touring of North America and Australia.Ember Swift not only performs on stage, but at John Winthrop Middle School in Deep River, Connecticut every year for the 8th grade class.Her loyal support network is thanks to a high-energy live show coupled with pertinent politics that reaches out to many communities.In 1996, she released her first self-titled album and started to develop her now loyal fan following that extends to tens of thousands of people across Canada, the United States, and Australia.It is the union between art and activism that forms the foundation of Swift's songwriting ethic; only through honest and open dialogue about global issues can we hope to inspire greater social awareness that will lead to social change