Original sentence: On April 8, 2009, Thornton and his musical group The Boxmasters appeared on CBC Radio One program Q which was widely criticized and received international attention after Thornton was persistently unintelligible and discourteous to host Jian Ghomeshi
Edited sentence: On April 8, 2009, Thornton and his musical group The Boxmasters appeared on CBC Radio One program Q and received international attention after Thornton was persistently unintelligible and discourteous to host Jian Ghomeshi