Original sentence: William ("Bill") David Baillie (born May 28, 1934 in Nelson, New Zealand) was a runner who represented New Zealand at the 1964 Summer Olympic Games in Tokyo where he placed 6th in the  5000m
Edited sentence: William ("Bill") David Baillie (born 28 May 1934 in Nelson, New Zealand) was a runner who represented New Zealand at the 1964 Summer Olympic Games in Tokyo where he placed 6th in the  5000m