Original sentence: (By contrast, President Clinton had  58, 843, 408 votes cast against him by American citizens, the highest total ever and still won, according to the National Archives and Records Administration.) This was more than any previous candidate in American history, surpassing Al Gore's record 50,996,582 popluar total in 2000..  Bush was the first presidential candidate since his father, George H.In the 2004 election, Bush won a second term with 60,693,281 popular votes, with his Democratic challenger, Massachusetts Senator John Kerry recieving 57,355,978 votes, according to the U.National Archives and Records Administration
Edited sentence: Bush was the first presidential candidate since his father, George H.In the 2004 election, Bush won a second term, an electoral majority, and also received 3.5 million popular votes more than his Democratic challenger, Massachusetts Senator John Kerry