Original sentence: Because of this, she drew heavy criticism from many local Democrats for running what most observers agreed was a weak campaign; specifically, they decried a severe lack of planning, claiming that she hastily-booked last-minute campaign stops in rural areas hostile to her and produced campaign literature of poor printing quality
Edited sentence: Because of this, she drew heavy criticism from many local Democrats for running a weak campaign, as if her election was a certainty; her lackluster campaign showed severe lack of planning, from hastily-booked last-minute campaign stops in rural areas hostile to her and campaign literature of poor printing quality