Original sentence: Olvir and Eyvind joined their nephew Thorolf Kveldulfsson on a number of viking expeditions after the latter received a longship as a gift from his father Kveldulf.The jarl refused Olvir permission to marry the girl, but he was so smitten that he abandoned his viking life to be near her.William Pencak compared Olvir's poetic career unfavorably with that of his grand-nephew Egil: "A tyrant needs insincere poets to praise him, and Olvir's career illustrates the problem of artists and thinkers serving political ends... the saga does not quote any of his poems
Edited sentence: Olvir and Eyvind joined their nephew Thorolf Kveldulfsson on a number of Viking expeditions after the latter received a longship as a gift from his father Kveldulf.The jarl refused Olvir permission to marry the girl, but he was so smitten that he abandoned his Viking life to be near her.William Pencak compared Olvir's poetic career unfavorably with that of his grandnephew Egil: "A tyrant needs insincere poets to praise him, and Olvir's career illustrates the problem of artists and thinkers serving political ends... the saga does not quote any of his poems