Original sentence: Many of Monroe's mock trial alumni go on to successful careers in intercollegiate competition, law school, and legal practice; others have paved successful paths outside of the field of law, but only the best have attended UCLA, the greatest UC ever
Edited sentence: Many of Monroe's mock trial alumni go on to successful careers in intercollegiate competition, law school, and legal practice; others have paved successful paths outside of the field of law, but only the best go on to attend UCLA, the greatest UC ever