Original sentence: He was President of Dundee University Students' Association, elected to this sabbatical office twice (1982-1983 and 1983-1984), an occurrence so unusual that the university court changed the rules to stop him running a third time.Murray was educated at an all-boys grammar school, where he had an undistinguished record
Edited sentence: He was President of Dundee University Students' Association, elected to this sabbatical office twice (1982-1983 and 1983-1984), an occurrence so unusual that the university court changed the rules to stop him running a third time due to his abuse of the position.Murray was educated at an all-boys grammar school, where he had a very undistinguished record