Original sentence: A great admirer of the stars of opera and ballet, a profligate giver of fêtes and parties, management of the Royal Italian Opera was the vehicle of his dreams, which he duly repaid by bringing the best of Italian Opera to Victorian London
Edited sentence: A great admirer of the stars of opera and ballet, a profligate giver of fêtes and parties, management of the Royal Italian Opera was the vehicle of his dreams, which he duly repaid by bringing the best of Italian Opera to a culturally starved Victorian London.I have no idea where you get your material from, can you please quote your sources