Original sentence: Bartley is remembered as an exceptional coach, having led the Toronto Rock to win the championships in 1999, 2000, 2002, and 2003.Less then 18 hours after the Toronto Rock won their 5th NLL Championship, former coach and General Manager Les Bartley, died on May 15, 2005 of cancer at the age of 51
Edited sentence: Less then 18 hours after the Toronto Rock won their 5th NLL Championship, the great coach and General Manager who built the championship teams in 1999, 2000, 2002, and 2003, Les Bartley died on May 15, 2005 of cancer at the age of 51