Original sentence: " Prior to Rakim's arrival on the scene, hip hop rhyming had still had strong ties to rapping's roots in improvisatory toasting, being in very regular meter and rhyme scheme (Run DMC, Kurtis Blow, etc), with simple lyrics and a steady and heavily prounounced rhythm.Rakim, however, introduced the idea of a rapid, continuous, free-rhythmic flow, based around multisyllabic and internal rhymes; the All Music Guide's Steve Huey wrote in the early 2000s that "Rakim's flow is smooth and liquid, inflected with jazz rhythms and carried off with an effortless cool that makes it sound as though he's not even breaking a sweat
Edited sentence: " Following the advent of Rakim's revolutionary rhyming style, hip hop music underwent a momentous transformation.Before him, hip hop rhyming had still had strong ties to rapping's roots in improvisatory toasting, being in very regular meter and rhyme scheme (Run DMC, Kurtis Blow, etc), with simple lyrics and a steady and heavily prounounced rhythm.Rakim, however, pioneered the idea of a rapid, continuous, free-rhythmic flow, based around multisyllabic and internal rhymes, meticulously engineered on the written page and which often required considerable skill in breath control and rhythmic awareness to deliver effectively; he All Music Guide's Steve Huey wrote in the early 2000s that "Rakim's flow is smooth and liquid, inflected with jazz rhythms and carried off with an effortless cool that makes it sound as though he's not even breaking a sweat