Original sentence: Indeed, the Blackhawks are now viewed with much indifference by Chicagoans, who feel that management is deliberately trying to alienate the fan base.Many hockey fans in Chicago prefer the American Hockey League's Chicago Wolves to the Hawks, who have advertised themselves by saying "We Play Hockey the Old-Fashioned Way: We Actually Win".Owner Bill Wirtz has raised ticket prices to an average of $50, and does not allow home games to be shown locally in the Chicago area.The Blackhawks continued to struggle, and finished last in the Central Division, 12 games out of the playoffs
Edited sentence: Indeed, the Blackhawks are now viewed with much indifference by Chicagoans, as the team seems to find any way possible to alienate what fans are left, what with owner "Dollar Bill" Wirtz raising ticket prices and still refusing to put home games on television.Many hockey fans in Chicago prefer the minor-league Chicago Wolves to the 'Hawks, who have advertised themselves by saying "We Play Hockey the Old-Fashioned Way: We Actually Win".The Blackhawks continue to struggle, and are currently second to last in the Western Conference Standings of the NHL