Original sentence: A few department chairmen at his university have also issued critical statements, though none of these has yet has addressed any of the points which Jones made in his paper and at his presentation at BYU.Some critics have claimed that Jones's analysis is similiar to that of other researchers which they have disputed in the past, including claims regarding evidence of squibs, "no major persistent fires visible" at WTC7, and what they allege are selectively edited quotes from Bill Manning and Stephen Gregory
Edited sentence: Critics claim Jones uses similiar disputed points that other researchers have used in the past, including making claims of "no major persistent fires visible" at WTC7, selectively edited quotes from Bill Manning (and Stephen Gregory) claims   and possible evidence of squibs.Jones's paper has also brought about comments from various departments with his university