Original sentence: A popular Burmese leader named Alaungpaya drove the Pegu forces out of northern Myanmar by 1753, and by 1759 he had once again conquered Pegu, resulting in total subjugation of the Mon people, and southern Myanmar, while also regaining control of Manipur
Edited sentence: A popular Burmese leader named Alaungpaya drove the Pegu forces out of northern Myanmar by 1753, and by 1759 he had once again conquered Pegu, largely exterminating the Mon people in the process, and southern Myanmar while also regaining control of Manipur