Original sentence: Most Shan are staunch Theravada Buddhists, and the Shan constitutes one of the four main Buddhist ethnic groups in Myanmar--the others being the Bamar, the Mon and the Rakhine.The Shan live primarily in the Shan State of Myanmar, but also inhabit parts of Mandalay Division, Kachin State, and Kayin State, and in adjacent regions of China and Thailand.Though no reliable census has been taken in Myanmar since 1935, the Shan are estimated to number approximately 6 million
Edited sentence: Most Shan are staunch Theravada Buddhists, and the Shan constitutes one of the four main Buddhist ethnic groups in Burma; the others are the Bamar, the Mon and the Rakhine.The Shan live primarily in the Shan State of Burma (Myanmar), but also inhabit parts of Mandalay Division, Kachin State, and Kayin State, and in adjacent regions of China and Thailand.Though no reliable census has been taken in Burma since 1935, the Shan are estimated to number approximately 6 million