Original sentence: Students come to UCLA from all 50 states and more than 100 countries, though according to statistics from 2001-05, an average 92.6% of the entire student body originated from California.The University of California, Los Angeles (generally known as UCLA) is a public research university located in Los Angeles, California, United States
Edited sentence: Applications for freshman enrollment at UCLA jumped by more than 9 percent for Fall 2008, with a record 55,369 applications received, making UCLA once again the most popular university in the entire country among new high school graduates within and outside the U.Students come to UCLA from all 50 states and more than 100 countries.The University of California, Los Angeles (generally known as UCLA) is an elite public research university located in Los Angeles, California, United States