Original sentence: Whereas most historians attempt to assume a neutral, detached tone of writing, in the tradition of Edward Gibbon, Carlyle does the complete reverse and unfolds his history by often writing in present-tense first-person plural: as though he and the reader were observers, indeed almost participants, on the streets of Paris at the fall of the Bastille or the public execution of Louis XVI
Edited sentence: Carlyle unfolds his history by often writing in present-tense first-person plural: as though he and the reader were observers, indeed almost participants, on the streets of Paris at the fall of the Bastille or the public execution of Louis XVI.Most historians attempt to assume a neutral, detached tone of writing, in the tradition of Edward Gibbon