Original sentence: The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints church across the street from the school allows seniors the use of their parking lots during the week, as they have only weekend services, while a distant lot at the athletic field provides space for juniors, who must have a valid reason for driving to school, such as a job, and also seniors who have been banished from the closer lots for breaking parking rules
Edited sentence: The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints church across the street from the school graciously allows seniors the use of their parking lots during the week, as they have only weekend services, while a distant lot at the athletic field provides space for juniors, who must have a valid reason for driving to school, such as a job, and also seniors who have been banished from the closer lots for breaking parking rules, such as not clearing the Baker lot by 4:00PM on marching band practice days