Original sentence: At its lowest recorded levels, it approaches 7.7 times the salinity of ocean water, but when its levels are high, its salinity drops to only slightly higher than the ocean.Because of this, the Great Salt Lake's degree of salinity also fluctuates greatly.Other smaller hypersaline lakes can be found can be found in western North America (Mono Lake), Africa (the seasonal Makgadikgadi Pan),.The Dead Sea, dividing Israel and Jordan, has 8.6 times the salinity of ocean water, and is also the world's deepest hypersaline lake.The Great Salt Lake, located in Utah, while having nearly three times the surface area of the Dead Sea, is shallower and experiences much greater fluctuations in level than the Dead Sea.The best known examples of hypersaline lakes are the Dead Sea and the Great Salt Lake.and on the French Polynesian island of Niau, there is a swampy landlocked hypersaline lagoon
Edited sentence: In western North America are Mono Lake and Great Salt Lake.On the French Polynesian island of Niau, there is a swampy landlocked hypersaline lagoon.The best-known example of a hypersaline lake is the Dead Sea, dividing Israel and Jordan, at 8.6 times the salinity of ocean water, which is also the world's deepest hypersaline lake.There are a number of saline lakes in Africa, one of the largest of which is the seasonal Makgadikgadi Pan