Original sentence: His brilliant portrayal of yuppie businessman serial killer Patrick Bateman was met with rave reviews and critical acclaim, but due to the controversy surrounding the book on which the movie was based, it was only a moderate financial success
Edited sentence: His brilliant portrayal of yuppie businessman serial killer Patrick Bateman was met with rave reviews and critical acclaim, but due to the controversy surrounding the book on which the movie was based, it was not as successful as it 'should' have been