Original sentence: Although the character Lucy cannot be established, it is certain that there is a relationship between the name Lucy and Wordsworth's sister within Wordsworth's poetry since Wordsworth used the name Lucy in reference to his sister in many poems, including "The Glow-Worm" and "Nutting".As such, the narrator experiences the events as one who is woken from a dream without having an understanding of what the dream entailed.In this state, he is not able to feel shock at knowing of he death.Since Lucy exists on an unconscious level within the narrator's perspective, the narrator cannot grasp her until she has died.The figure of Lucy is presented as character connected to nature who exists in a state between the spiritual and human; similar to a mythical nymph.The lifeless rocks and stones depicted in the concluding line convey the finality of Lucy's death.This fact is thematically represented within the poem by having Lucy's death occur between the two stanzas
Edited sentence: " The lifeless rocks and stones described in the concluding line convey the finality of Lucy's death.Although Lucy cannot be established, it is certain that there is a relationship between the name Lucy and Wordsworth's sister within Wordsworth's poetry since Wordsworth used the name Lucy in reference to his sister in many poems, including "The Glow-Worm" and "Nutting".As such, he experiences the events as one who is woken from a dream without an understanding of what the dream entailed, and is not able to feel shock at learning of her death.Lucy is presented as character connected to nature who exists in a state between the spiritual and human; similar to a mythical nymph.Since Lucy exists on an unconscious level fot the narrator, he cannot grasp her until she has died.This is thematically represented in the poem by placing Lucy's death occur between the two stanzas