Original sentence: According to the IDF Palestinians constitute the majority of the population in the area Israel now controls (Israel, the Gaza Strip, and the West Bank).At the war's end, Israel controlled of 78% of Mandatory Palestine, and much of the local Arab populace had either been expelled or fled.Both Clinton's and the subsequent Trump plan confine most of that majority to an area less than a quarter of the land.That year the United Nations adopted a Partition Plan, which allotted 56% of the land to the 30% of the population that was Jewish.The Balfour Declaration was a public statement issued by the British government in 1917 during the First World War announcing support for the establishment of a  "national home for the Jewish people" in Palestine, then an Ottoman region with a small minority Jewish population.This was rejected by the Arab nations and hostilities broke out between the sides.When Israel declared its independence, several neighboring Arab states entered the conflict
Edited sentence: By the time hostilities had concluded, Israel was in control of 78% of Mandatory Palestine, and much of the local Arab populace was either expelled or fled.Hostilities broke out between the sides, later developing into full-scale invasion by several of the neighboring Arab states following Israel's declaration of independence.That year the United Nations adopted a Partition Plan, which allotted 56% of the land to the Jewish population, but it was rejected by the Arab nations.The Balfour Declaration was a public statement issued by the British government in 1917 during the First World War announcing support for the establishment of a "national home for the Jewish people" in Palestine, then an Ottoman region with a small minority Jewish population