Original sentence: Rose initially refuses outright but, clearly still in love with him, her normal toughness dissolves and he persuades her to let him hide in the family's air raid shelter.The strain is intolerable and as the day progresses, the police net closes, after a nosey newspaper reporter guesses where the man is hiding
Edited sentence: Rose initially refuses outright but, clearly still in love with him (and also, we sense, attracted by the excitment the event is bringing to her otherwise dreary life), her normal toughness dissolves and he persuades her to let him hide in the family's air raid shelter.The strain is intolerable and as the day progresses the police net closes in, after a nosey newspaper reporter guesses where the man is hiding