Original sentence: After basic training, he came home and married, eventually became a supply clerk at Camp Pendleton outside of San Diego and appeared on the second season of the hit TV show American Idol.Upon graduation from John Glenn High School in Westland, he attended Western Michigan University before he joined the United States Marine Corps
Edited sentence: After basic training, he came home and married his high school sweet heart Ann Marie and eventually became a supply clerk at Camp Pendleton outside of San Diego and won the hearts of many while on the second season of the hit TV show American Idol.Upon graduation from John Glenn High School in Westland, he attended Western Michigan University before he decided to serve his country in the United States Marine Corps