Original sentence: Family members supplemented their meager farm income by hiring out for odd jobs and working at "treasure-seeking", "a form of magical supernaturalism then popular throughout the northeastern United States".Meanwhile, the Smith family faced financial hardship due in part to the November 1823 death of Smith's oldest brother Alvin, who had assumed leadership of the family largely in place of his discouraged father
Edited sentence: " Family members supplemented their meager farm income by hiring out for odd jobs and working at "treasure-seeking", "a form of magical supernaturalism then popular throughout the northeastern United States".Meanwhile, the Smith family faced financial hardship due in part to the November 1823 death of Smith's oldest brother Alvin, who had assumed leadership of the family in place of his discouraged father, who was sometimes "out of the way through wine