Original sentence: Ian Eloff (1973), Member of the XV Olympic Winter Games (1988 organizing committee, built the computer system used to score and manage the games, something that is always so crucial to the success of the entire games
Edited sentence: Ian Eloff (1973), Member of the XV Olympic Winter Games(1988) organizing committee, built the computer system used to score and manage the games, something that is always so crucial to the success of the entire games