Original sentence: The longest sequence, displaying deep romantic feeling, was written to Tommaso dei Cavalieri (), who was 23 years old when Michelangelo met him in 1532, at the age of 57
Edited sentence: The longest sequence, displaying deep romantic feeling, was written to his lover Tommaso dei Cavalieri (), who was 23 years old when Michelangelo met him in 1532, at the age of 57