Original sentence: During the first of these meeting, according to the records of the Palestine Papers, the Palestinian Authority proposed a land swap, which would include Israel keeping Israeli settlements in East Jerusalem.The land in Ehud Olmert's map included the four settlement blocks of Gush Etzion (with Efrat), Ma'ale Adumim, Giv'at Ze'ev, and Ariel, in addition to all Israeli settlements in East Jerusalem (Har Homa)
Edited sentence: During the first of these meeting, according to the records of the Palestine Papers, the Palestinian Authority proposed an unprecedented land swap.Israel, however, offered nothing in return in concessions at that meeting.Offering Israel the opportunity to annex all of it's illegal settlements in East Jerusalem.The land in Ehud Olmert's map included the four illegal settlement blocks of Gush Etzion (with Efrat), Ma'ale Adumim, Giv'at Ze'ev, and Ariel, in addition to all illegal Israeli settlements in East Jerusalem (Har Homa)