Original sentence: " {He had tried to enlist in 1914 but was rejected for poor eyesight; coincidentally, Arthur Lowe in real life had tried to enlist in the Merchant Navy prior to World War II but was rejected for poor eyesight.Captain George Mainwaring ( (), although Captain Square and Private Cheeseman always incorrectly pronounce it phonetically, i.ɪŋ/ ()) is a fictional bank manager and Home Guard platoon commander portrayed by Arthur Lowe on the BBC television sitcom Dad's Army, set in the fictional seaside town of Walmington-on-Sea during World War II
Edited sentence: " (He had tried to enlist in 1914 but was rejected for poor eyesight; coincidentally, Arthur Lowe in real life had tried to enlist in the Merchant Navy prior to World War II but was rejected for poor eyesight.Captain George Mainwaring ( () is a fictional bank manager and Home Guard platoon commander portrayed by Arthur Lowe on the BBC television sitcom Dad's Army, set in the fictional seaside town of Walmington-on-Sea during World War II.In the episode "A Man of Action", Walmington-on-Sea is cut off when a bomb destroys a portion of the railway and the waterworks are damaged, Mainwaring temporarily imposes martial law and begins a coup d'etat, taking over power from the Mayor - he and the platoon march on the Town Hall, under the new law people need permits to do things like take a bath and looters will be shot on sight