Original sentence: Asian and Pacific Islander Americans were struggling to find their identities in American society.Charter classes of CSUN, CSUSM, UNLV.In 2000, the ten founding fathers founded Alpha Psi Rho at San Diego State University.While some found prosperity in gangs, others pursued higher education becoming capable gentlemen in the community
Edited sentence: Asian and Pacific Islander-Americans were struggling to find their identities in American Society.Charter Classes of CSUN, CSUSM, UNLV.In 2000, the Ten Founding Fathers founded Alpha Psi Rho at San Diego State University.In order to perserve true brotherhood it is important for the brothers to remain true to their past.Though to assimilate the intimidating image that Alpha Psi Rho holds, it is not common to find a member with an urban low-income lifestyle.While some found prosperity in gangs others pursued higher education becoming capable gentlemen in the community