Original sentence: Dolly Shepherd (1887–1983), aviator, made her return to parachuting from balloons in a display at Ashby, after recovering from a near-fatal accident.Frederick Bailey Deeming (1853–1892), serial killer and Jack The Ripper suspect.James Green (born 1944), crime and non-fiction author, lived in the area in the 1970s and 1980s.Joseph Hall (1574–1656), satirist and bishop, was born in Ashby-de-la-Zouch.Max Rushden (born 18 April 1979), radio presenter, went to school Ashby Grammar School between 1994 and 1996
Edited sentence: Dolly Shepherd (1887–1983), notable aviator, made her return to parachuting from balloons in a display at Ashby, after recovering from a near-fatal accident.Frederick Bailey Deeming (1853–1892), British serial killer and Jack The Ripper suspect.James Green (born 1944), crime and non-fiction author lived in the area in the 1970s and 1980s.Joseph Hall (1574–1656), renowned satirist and bishop, was born in Ashby-de-la-Zouch.Max Rushden (born 18 April 1979), radio presenter, went to school Ashby Grammar School for two years between 1994-1996