Original sentence: Alexander Straub is a native of Darmstadt, Germany.Alexander Straub is a prominent German entrepreneur and financier, focusing on the internet and technology sectors.At the age of twenty he sailed for his native Germany in the Barcelona Olympic Games.He also worked at McKinsey & Co as a consultant and as general partner at Lazard Technology Partners (LTP) in New York.He is also CEO and co-founder of Pixsta, a image browse and search company.He recently co-founded the world’s first 4G network operator Truphone, which provides VoIP technology to the mobile via Wifi.He was a Rhodes Scholar at the University of Oxford and holds two engineering degrees, one from Darmstadt and one from Cornell University.In 1999, Straub and business partner Rouzbeh Pirouz entered and won a Sunday Times of London entrepreneurship contest.Prior to Mondus, Straub held positions with Goldman Sachs’principal investment area in London where he assisted an investment into SSL, later floated on NASDAQ under the name Parthus.Straub has also conducted research in material science as a DAAD Scholar at Stanford University.With their prize money the two founded Mondus.com business plan
Edited sentence: Alexander Straub is a prominent European entrepreneur and financier, focusing on the internet and technology sectors.He also worked at McKinsey & Co as a consultant.He is also CEO and co-founder of Pixsta, a revolutionary image browse and search company.He recently co-founded the world’s first 4G network operator Truphone, which brings VoIP technology to the mobile via Wifi.He was a Rhodes Scholar at the University of Oxford and holds two engineering degrees- one from his native Darmstadt in Germany and one from Cornell University, USA and conducted research in material science as a DAAD Scholar at Stanford University.Previously he was a general partner at Lazard Technology Partners (LTP) in New York.Prior to Mondus, Alexander held positions with Goldman Sachs’ principal investment area in London where he assisted an investment into SSL, later floated on NASDAQ under the name Parthus.Prior to joining LTP he co-founded Mondus, an Internet b2b marketplace, with Rouzbeh Pirouz