Original sentence: In 1902, Uchida toured the Gulf Coast region of the United States, most likely looking for agricultural needs that Japanese businessmen could fulfill.In the United States, rice farming was still in its infancy, and local rice farmers were not growing to full potential.Some of the better known of these immigrants were Seito Saibara, who would establish a large colony near Webster, and Kichimatsu Kishi who would establish a colony in Orange County, Texas
Edited sentence: In 1902, Uchida toured the Gulf Coast region of the United States, most likely looking for agricultural needs that Japanese businessmen who were looking to make a large profit could fulfill.In the United States, the rice farming was still in its early stage by local farmers, who at the time, did not have the full potential knowledge to produce the rice crops that could be yielded.Some of the more well known of these immigrants were Seito Saibara, who would establish a large colony near Webster, and Kichimatsu Kishi who would establish a colony in Orange County, Texas