Original sentence: It was his conviction that girls should be given a broad and liberal education with an emphasis on scholarship and despite having no daughters of his own, he left a third of his fortune to the City of London to fund the foundation of a girls' school, a £20,000 legacy for the Corporation of London.The school was founded by William Ward in 1894
Edited sentence: The school was founded by William Ward in 1894, a man of vision and belief: it was his conviction that girls should be given a broad and liberal education with an emphasis on scholarship and despite having no daughters of his own, he left a third of his fortune to the City of London to fund the foundation of a girls' school, a £20,000 legacy for the Corporation of London