Original sentence: As of 2005, the official population of Jerusalem city is 706,368.The total area of the sovereign territory of Israel —excluding all territories captured by Israel in 1967 — is 20,770 (20,330 land) square km; the total area under Israeli law —including East Jerusalem and the Golan Heights — is 22,145 (21,671 land) square km; the total area under Israeli control — including the military-controlled and Palestinian-governed territory of the West Bank — is 28,023 (27,549 land) square km
Edited sentence: "  As of 2005, the official population of Jerusalem city is 706,368, and still in dispute.Israel's Declaration of Establishment called for a written constitution to be submitted to a constituent assembly in 1949; 57 years after the UN called for the constitution and 56 years after the founders of the State of Israel there is still no written constitution.The UN resolution that partitioned Palestine called for Jerusalem to be an "international city.The total area of the sovereign territory of Israel —excluding all territories occupied by Israel since 1967 — is 20,770 (20,330 land) square km; the total area under Israeli law —including East Jerusalem and the Golan Heights — is 22,145 (21,671 land) square km; the total area under Israeli control — including the military-controlled and Palestinian-governed territory of the West Bank — is 28,023 (27,549 land) square km