Original sentence: He received a Bachelor's degree in Education from John Carroll University.His campaign drew attention after he was subject of an April 2008 Federal Elections Commission complaint regarding his campaign finance activities.In 2007, Jon Powers decided to run for Congress in New York's 26th congressional district.Powers returned from Iraq with the intention of becoming a social studies teacher in Clarence public schools.Powers served as an artillery platoon leader in the 1st Armored Division, and later as the Battalion Commander's Adjutant in Baghdad and Najaf.Powers was born and raised in the Buffalo suburb of Clarence, New York
Edited sentence: In 2007, Jon Powers decided to run for Congress in New York's 26th congressional district, where he was born and raised.Jon Powers returned from Iraq with the intention of becoming a social studies teacher in Clarence public schools.Jon Powers was born and raised in the Buffalo suburb of Clarence, New York, where his parents served in local leadership positions with the Lions Club and volunteered with their church.Jon received a Bachelor's degree in Education from John Carroll University.Powers served as an artillery platoon leader in the Army’s 1st Armored Division, and later as the Battalion Commander’s Adjutant in Baghdad and Najaf.The War Kids Relief website is undergoing construction.This instilled in Jon a sense of civic responsibility.While War Kids Relief was setup, its impact is not known