Original sentence: He relocated to London in 2000 to study under cellist Raphael Wallfisch at the Guildhall School of Music and Drama and has since been under the mentorship of Israeli pedagogue Uzi Wiesel.His awards include the 2004 Muriel Taylor Scholarship in London (former winners include Raphael Wallfisch, Steven Isserlis and Alexander Baillie), Hattori Foundation Award and the E.Thomas Rann (Born December 10 1981 in Adelaide) is a young Australian cellist
Edited sentence: He relocated to London in 2000 to study under distinguished cellist Raphael Wallfisch at the Guildhall School of Music and Drama and has since been under the mentorship of Israeli pedagogue Uzi Wiesel.His many awards include the 2004 Muriel Taylor Scholarship in London (former winners include Raphael Wallfisch, Steven Isserlis and Alexander Baillie), Hattori Foundation Award and the E.Thomas Rann (Born December 10 1981 in Adelaide) is increasingly recognised as the most exciting young Australian cellist to have emerged in recent years