Original sentence: Dorje Shugden (), "Powerful thunderbolt"; also known as Dhol-rgyal) is a relatively recent, but very controversial, deity within the complex pantheons of Himalayan Buddhism
Edited sentence: Dorje Shugden (), "Powerful thunderbolt"; also known derogatorily as Dhol-rgyal) is a Protecting Deity within the complex pantheons of Himalayan Buddhism who has been relied upon for over 300 years by members of the Gelug tradition