Original sentence: Barack Obama's meteoric rise in visibility began almost exactly four years before, when, as a State Senator, he was chosen to make the keynote address at the 2004 convention.Other candidates achieved minimal success before pulling out of the presidential race early in the primary season.The first First Lady to run for President (several have served as governors in the past), Senator Clinton had gathered up a great deal of support among the leadership of the Party during her first term and a half in the Senate.With the race appearing to be so close, John Edwards merely suspended his campaign and thus kept his delegates
Edited sentence: Alternative candidates will be mentioned and have support.Barack Obama's rise began almost exactly four years before, when as a State Senator, he had be chosen to make the keynote address at the 2004 convention.Clinton had gathered up a great deal of support among the leadership of the Party during her first term and a half in the Senate.His presidential campaign was considered by many to be breathtaking, running even with Mrs.The first First Lady to run for President (several have served as governors in the past), Mrs.With the race appearing to be so close, and John Edwards merely suspending his campaign and thus keeping his delegates