Original sentence: In a future world where an organization called the GGP has taken control of the world, Rin Ogata was a promising up-and-comming ballet dancer, but suffered a serious injury and decided to quit.Years later in college she comes across a club building and soon finds herself intrigued by a transforming motorcycle like vehicle called a Rideback
Edited sentence: In the future, an organization called the GGP has taken control of the world.Rin Ogata was a promising up-and-comming ballet dancer, but suffered a serious injury while dancing and decided to quit.Years later in college, she comes across a club building and soon finds herself intrigued by a transforming motorcycle-like robotic vehicle called a "Rideback"