Original sentence: Following the Second Intifada that begun in 2000, Israel considerably restricted Palestinian freedom of movement within the Palestinian territories and between the Territories and the rest of the world.The treaty aimed improvement of Palestinian freedom of movement  and economic activity within the Palestinian territories, and open the Gaza–Egypt border
Edited sentence: Following the Palestinian uprising that begun in 2000, Israel considerably restricted Palestinian freedom of movement within the Palestinian Occupied Territories and between the Territories and the rest of the world.The treaty aimed improvement of Palestinian freedom of movement  and economic activity within the Palestinian Occupied Territories, and open the Gaza–Egypt border