Original sentence: Jaunpuri continued travelling eventually reaching Kandahar, whose leader had accepted his claim.The first was Jaunpuri's son, who continued to face persecution in Gujarat, resulting in his eventual imprisonment, and death from worsening wounds inflicted by shackles.Thus Jaunpuri embarked a trek westward with his followers through Gujarat and then into Sindh
Edited sentence: He continued travelling eventually reaching Kandahar, whose leader had accepted his claim.The first was his son, who continued to face persecution in Gujarat, resulting in his eventual imprisonment, and death from worsening wounds inflicted by shackles.Thus he embarked a trek westward with his followers through Gujarat and then into Sindh