Original sentence: Jones underwent a brief period of rebellion against his heritage and his parents' religious standards during his freshman year of high school, resulting in a few hidden rock recordings (most popular music is forbidden by his fundamentalist Baptists) which were confessed to his father
Edited sentence: Jones underwent a brief period of rebellion against his heritage and his parents' religious standards during his freshman year of high school, hardly more than a few hidden rock recordings about which he quickly confessed to his father