Original sentence: Among the new commitments was aid for Sudan.Kilgour nevertheless voted against the government.Many critics claim that there were more serious problems with Canada's justice system to deal with, such as dangerous offenders.They also sussget that Martin was only using the same-sex marriage issue to hide the sponsorship scandal and attack the Conservative Party.This aid was attacked as a perceived attempt to win the vote of a single independent MP, David Kilgour
Edited sentence: Among the new commitments was aid for Sudan, though this aid was attacked as a perceived attempt to win the vote of a single independent MP, David Kilgour.Kilgour nevertheless went on to vote against the government.Many critics note that there were more serious problems with Canada's justice system to deal with, such as dangerous offenders, and Martin was only using the same-sex marriage issue to hide the sponsorship scandal and attack the Conservative Party