Original sentence: At that moment, a German officer together with a Resistance commander found their way into the Club and convinced the men to surrender.In the Grose Club members of the Kriegsmarine watched as the crowd below their balcony grew and people danced and cheered.The Germans ten placed a machinegun on the balcony and started shooting the crowds.The motives behind the shooting have remained unclear.The result was that at the brink of peace 120 people were badly injured and 22 died.The shooting finally came to an end after a member of the resistance climbed into the tower of the royal palace and started shooting onto the balcony and into the Club
Edited sentence: In the Grose Club members of the Kriegsmarine watched as the crowd below their balcony grew and grew, people danced and cheered.It has always remained uncertain why it happened but the sad result was that at the brink of peace 120 people were badly injured and 22 died.The shooting finally came to an end after a member of the resistance climbed into the tower of the royal palace and started shooting onto the balcony and into the club.Then a German officer together with a Resistance commander found their way into the Club and convinced the men to surrender.Then for some sort of reason the Germans placed a machinegun on the balcony and started shooting into the crowds