Original sentence: Biographer Jon Krakauer has suggested two factors which may have contributed to McCandless' death in August, 1992.He had a 10-pound bag of rice, a Remington semi-automatic rifle, with plenty of.However, Krakauer insists that starvation was not, as McCandless' death certificate states, the primary cause of death.On the other side of the page, Chris added, "I HAVE HAD A HAPPY LIFE AND THANK THE LORD
Edited sentence: He had carried to the bus a 10-pound bag of rice, a Remington semi-automatic rifle, with plenty of.However, Krakauer insists that starvation was not, as McCandless' critics claim, the primary cause of death.In an effort to exonerate McCandless of charges of foolhardiness, biographer Jon Krakauer has suggested two factors which may have contributed to McCandless' death in August, 1992.On the other side of the page, which was blank, Chris added a brief but thoughtfully true final message: "I HAVE HAD A HAPPY LIFE AND THANK THE LORD