Original sentence: He also studied piano with Teodor Leszetycki  and composition with Hermann Graedener.He was the conductor of the Cincinnati Symphony Orchestra 1912-1917 and the Cincinnati  May Festival 1914-1917.Herman Thuman, wrote a review in the The Cincinnati Enquirer  that Kunwald “…does not find it necessary to resort to vaudeville stunts to gain the acclaim of the crowd”
Edited sentence: He also studied piano with Teodor Leszetycki and composition with Hermann Graedener.He was the conductor of the Cincinnati Symphony Orchestra 1912-1917 and the Cincinnati May Festival 1914-1917.Herman Thuman, wrote a review in the The Cincinnati Enquirer that Kunwald “…does not find it necessary to resort to vaudeville stunts to gain the acclaim of the crowd”