Original sentence: Also Band Night is a regular World Challenge event that takes place.House Music is the largest event of the school calendar, taking place generally around mid-November.Many students take part and a major portion of their time is devoted to fund raising.The DoE at KEGS is run mainly by Ms Sharpe and Mr Greenwood
Edited sentence: Also Band Night is a regular World Challenge event that takes place, with Band Night 2005 'Take a Walk on the Wildside' being the best ever.House Musk is the largest event of the school calendar, taking place generally around mid-November.Many students go on this and a major part of their time is devoted to fund raising.The DoE at KEGS is run mainly by Ms Sharp and Mr Greenwood