Original sentence: After some reflection, interacting with the hotel porter, and listening to the Sonata, Henry finally decides to leave and go to London for his recital.At a post-recital press conference, he meets Helen Morrison, a music critic for The New Yorker.At the beginning of his stay, Henry’s symptoms worsen and his final recital is in jeopardy.He barely escapes catastrophe as he suffers an anxiety attack on stage, running outside after finishing a number and smoking a cigarette.He returns to the stage after a long absence following the death of his wife only to discover that his performance is marred by stage fright and overall mental instability.Helen joins him on the piano bench, rescuing him, thus earning his trust.His recitals become more and more perilous, thus jeopardizing his comeback tour and his much anticipated and publicized final concert in London.Meanwhile, despite his agent Paul’s best efforts, Henry’s mental condition declines steadily.They meet again a few days later at Steinway Hall, where Henry suffers another episode while attempting to perform
Edited sentence: A peculiar relationship forms between the reserved old master and the free-spirited journalist.At a post-recital press conference, he meets Helen Morrison, a music critic for the New Yorker.At the beginning of his stay, Henry’s symptoms worsen.But the place has an eerie quality that starts acting on his psyche, as do a series of strangely empathetic encounters around the hotel that gradually work to rebuild his sense of connectedness to himself and nature, until he’s finally ready to attend the other pianist’s recital and come to terms with his past.He barely escapes catastrophe as he suffers an anxiety attack on stage.He returns to the stage after a long absence following a traumatic experience only to discover that his performance is marred by stage fright and overall mental instability.Helen learns about some dark secrets in Henry’s life and tries her best to keep him going, a task at which she will eventually fail.Helen rescues him in extremis thus earning his trust.His recitals become more and more perilous, thus jeopardizing his comeback tour and his much anticipated and publicised final concert in London.Meanwhile, despite Paul’s (his agent) best efforts, Henry’s mental condition declines steadily.They meet again a few days later at Steinway Hall, where Henry suffers another episode