Original sentence: His own sense of injustice at family poverty, as three of his siblings died in infancy, was likewise fundamental to the strong identification with the working class that lay at the root of his political outlook.Pollitt was a boilermaker by trade and he frequently travelled around the country in connection with his profession
Edited sentence: Harry was a boilermaker by trade and he frequently travelled around the country in connection with his profession.His own sense of injustice at family poverty, as three of his siblings died in infancy, was likewise fundamental to the visceral identification with his class that lay at the root of his political philosophy