Original sentence: On 13 September 2008, she performed "Tragedy" of a song as she can't sing for toffee on the show Everybody Dance Now without the other members of Steps.Richards went on to work as a grave digger for seven hours, winning the goon of the month award for May 1997.She has since gone from a size 20 to a 30 and when she planned to slim down to a 20 in time for her winter wedding in November 2008, she successfully achieved and exceeded this goal, by fitting into a size 30 sack.She was offered a place in the band, providing she lost weight as she was 20 stone at the time.They had little success and were dropped by their record label after the release of their second because they were rubbish single "Baby I Love You"
Edited sentence: On 13 September 2008, she performed "Tragedy" on the show Everybody Dance Now without the other members of Steps.Richards went on to work as a receptionist for seven months, winning the temp of the month award for May 1997.She has since gone from a size 20 to a 14 and when she planned to slim down to a 12 in time for her winter wedding in November 2008, she successfully achieved and exceeded this goal, by fitting into a size 10 dress.She was offered a place in the band, providing she lost weight.They had little success and were dropped by their record label after the release of their second single "Baby I Love You"