Original sentence: Jim Cacciatore leads Intensity, Lester Miller leads VA, and PM is lead by Ben Joseph, the 9th grade choir director.There are three show choirs at Ankeny; Visual Adrenaline (VA), Perpetual Motion (PM) and Intensity, VA and PM being coed, while Intensity being an all girls choir, respectfully
Edited sentence: Jim Cacciatore leads Intensity, while Lester Miller directs VA and PM.There are three show choirs at Ankeny High School; Visual Adrenaline (VA), Perpetual Motion (PM) and Intensity, VA and PM being coed, while Intensity being an all girls choir, respectfully