Original sentence: Additionally, a high number of small towns replicating services- such as police, highway maintainance and parks departments lead to a higher number of civil-service government employees.Gaughan became a nationally-recognized advocate of regionalism largely because of a series of regionalism conferences at the Chautauqua Institution in which he organized in 1997.Gaughan is an attorney and an advocate of government reform, in particular for the establishment of regional government and regional consciousness within the Buffalo-Niagara region, which encompasses the cities of Buffalo, New York and Niagara Falls, New York, their suburbs and surrounding rural areas
Edited sentence: Additionally, a high number of small towns replicating services- such as police, highway maintianance and parks departments lead to a higher number of civil-service government employees.Gaughan is an attorney and an advocate of government reform, in particular for the establishment of regional government and regional consciousness within the Buffalo-Niagara region which encompasses the cities of Buffalo, New York and Niagara Falls, New York, their suburbs and surrounding rural areas.Gaughan neglected to actually provide any proposal or process that could reduce the layers of government to a more efficent metro form of rgional governance.Gaughan neglects to detail the high levels of appointed and civil service employees that actually control the government thruogh thier unions and the New York State Taylor(pro-union) laws.Gaughan organized a series of regionalism conferences at the Chautauqua Institution in 1997