Original sentence: 2009: Lea Guilbeault was celebrating her birthday at the Mikasa Sushi Bar in Montreal, Canada when a large slab of decorative concrete from a nearby building detached and fell 17 storeys
Edited sentence: 2009: Katie Ladany, a 23-year-old woman was jogging in Fairmount Park in Philadelphia, Pennsylvania when a 30ft (9m) tree branch broke off and fell from a height of 50ft (15m), striking her in the head and killing her instantly.2009: Lea Guilbeault was celebrating her 33rd birthday at the Mikasa Sushi Bar in Montreal, Canada when a large slab of decorative concrete from a nearby building detached and fell 17 storeys