Original sentence: Also in the area include are the Masala Zone curry house on Marshall Street, the White Horse pub on Newburgh Street (a good place for a drink after work in the summer), as well as Zebranos and Bar Monaco on Ganton Street and the many bars of Beak Street
Edited sentence: Better places in the area include the excellent Masala Zone curry house on Marshall Street, the White Horse pub on Newburgh Street (a good place for a drink after work in the summer), as well as Zebranos and Bar Monaco on Ganton Street and the many bars of Beak Street.Both are, in your authors opinion, naff