Original sentence: She volunteered with the American Red Cross but with the bombing of Pearl Harbor, Julia joined the Office of Strategic Services (OSS) (Julia initially attempted to enlist in the United States Navy but was turned down due to her height )
Edited sentence: She volunteered with the American Red Cross but with the bombing of Pearl Harbor, Julia joined the Office of Strategic Services (OSS) (Julia initially attempted to enlist in the United States Navy but was turned down due to her height)