Original sentence: Guests included Carol Vorderman, who paid tribute to him, saying, "If he were here he would have welcomed you one-by-one, greeting every one of you by the hand and would have wanted a photograph taken".In 2008, some three years after Whiteley's death, Giggleswick School announced its plans to raise £2m to build a Theatre in his honour.Sent with a team of optical professionals to Ethiopia, the VAO team found three Ethiopians whose eyes fitted Whiteley's prescription.The 300-seat theatre will be built at the school where Whiteley was a pupil and governor, but will be a resource for the whole Dales community.The BBC followed this story on their Inside Out programme which was broadcast on 19 September 2007.Three pairs of Whiteley's spectacles were donated by Kathryn Apanowicz, his long-term girlfriend, to optical charity Vision Aid Overseas (VAO).Work started on the first phase of the £2m project the same month
Edited sentence: Guests included Carol Vorderman who paid tribute to him, saying, "if he were here he would have welcomed you one-by-one, greeting every one of you by the hand and would have wanted a photograph taken".In 2008, some three years after Richard's untimely death, Giggleswick School announced its plans to raise £2m to build a Theatre in Richard's honour.Sent with a team of optical professionals to Ethiopia, the VAO team found three Ethiopians whose eyes fitted Richard's prescription.The 300 seat theatre will be built at the School where Richard was a pupil and governor, but will be a resource for the whole dales community.The BBC followed this unusual story on their Inside Out programme which was broadcast on 19 September 2007.Three pairs of Richard's spectacles were donated by Kathryn Apanowicz, his long-term girlfriend, to optical charity Vision Aid Overseas (VAO).Work started on the first phase of the £2m project in August 2009