Original sentence: Mike Campbell-Lamerton (1934 - March 18, 2005) was a second-row forward, who played his club rugby for Blackheath Rugby Club, Halifax, London Scottish and the Army.Three of Campbell-Lamerton’s four children, Jeremy, Michael and Ian, went on to play rugby for London Scottish, Jeremy winning three Scotland caps in 1986 and 1987
Edited sentence: Mike Campbell-Lamerton (1934-March 18, 2005), who played his club rugby for Blackheath Rugby Club, Halifax, London Scottish and the Army, was the epitome of a second-row forward, as awe-inspiring in his rugby shirt as he was in his military kit.Three of Campbell-Lamerton’s four children, Jeremy, Michael and Ian, all went on to play rugby for London Scottish, Jeremy winning three Scotland caps in 1986 and 1987