Original sentence: As of March 21, 2005, the total deaths of American soldiers as a direct result of the Iraq invasion, had reached over 1500 from an all volunteer military.Of these, over 1318 lost their lives after the "end of major hostilities" was announced by President Bush on May 1, 2003.Others have remarked that in comparison to other engagements involving the numbers of troops, the scope of the engagements and the duration of the action, that the percentage of deaths and causalties is less than an eighth of those from previous military actions.The last argument was considered to be an extremely unlikely event
Edited sentence: As of March 21, 2005, the total deaths of American soldiers as a direct result of the Iraq invasion, had reached over 1500 mostly young men.Of these, over 1318 lost their lives after the "end of major hostilities" was announced by president Bush on May 1, 2003