Original sentence: Kaye and Roiben spend the day at Kaye's home and, discover that strange events are affecting the mortal world.Kaye receives a call from her friend Janet inviting her to come to a Halloween rave held at the local waterfront, she tries to persuade her not to go but fails.She also discovers that Janet's openly gay brother, Corny, has followed a faerie knight he fell in love with, to the court.The story closes with Kaye 'giving' the kiss back, And a hopefully 'happily ever after' ending
Edited sentence: Kaye and Roiben spend the day at Kaye's home, and discover that strange events are affecting the mortal world.Kaye receives a call from her friend Janet, inviting her to come to a Halloween rave held at the waterfront, she tries to persuade her not to go but fails.She also discovers that Janet's openly gay brother, Corny, has followed a faerie knight he became infatuated with to the court.The story closes with Kaye "giving" the kiss back, and a hopefully "happily ever after" ending