Original sentence: Along the street are numerous other gay bars, including Comptons (one of the first exclusively and openly gay bars to open there in the 1980s), and G-A-Y bar.Also on the street are a variety of cafés, tea rooms (included a branch of the renowned Patisserie Valerie) and restaurants (including Balans (which, unusually for much of England, is open 24 hours a day), and a variety of sex shops (one of which, Clone Zone, part of a nationwide chain, is exclusively aimed at the gay market)
Edited sentence: Along the street are numerous other gay bars, including Comptons (one of the first exclusively and openly gay bars to open there in the 1980's), and G-A-Y bar.Also on the street are a variety of cafés, tea rooms (included a branch of the renowned Patisserie Valerie) and restaurants (including Balans (which, unusually for much of England, is open 24 hours a day0), and a variety of sex shops (one of which, Clone Zone, part of a nationwide chain, is exclusively aimed at the gay market)