Original sentence: Boys from St.Castle High School should be the local school for children from all over North Belfast (including the Shore Road, Mount Vernon, Tigers Bay, Shore Crescent, the Wider Shankill Area and Ballysillan).Castle High enjoys good cross community links with local boys school, St.Castle High is situated in the wooded grounds of the former Dunlambert Estate.It is a non-selective state controlled co-educational school for pupils aged from 11 to 16.Patricks College.Patricks visit Castle High on a regular basis attending the after school Photography Club and recently pupils from both schools went on a Poetry course in Yorkshire over in England.The G factor was the school's version of the X Factor where pupils would perform in front of judges; 1 Teacher, and 2 Grandparents.The highlight of the day has to be 5 boys performing YMCA with the audience joining in too
Edited sentence: Castle High School should be the local school for idiots from all over North Belfast (including the Shore Road, Mount Vernon, Tigers Bay, Shore Crescent, the Wider Shankill Area, Ballysillan and other paramilitary run estates).Castle High is situated in the wooded grounds of the Dunlambert Estate.It is a non-selective state controlled co-educational school for twits aged from 11 to 16.Nowadays it is used by the wasters to go there so that they can smoke and drink alcoholic beverages.The G factor was the school's version of the X Factor where pupils would perform in front of judges; 1 Teacher, and 2 Erotic Film Stars.The highlight of the day has to be 5 boys performing "I touch myself" by Divinyls with the audience joining in too.We are the champions, no time for losers hahaha