Original sentence: Permits would be required for a large range of activities, with Neve Gordon writing that the system as a whole "operated to shape practically every aspect of Palestinian life".The permit system began to be constructed prior to the end of hostilities in the 1967 Six-Day War
Edited sentence: Permits would be required for a large range of activities, with Neve Gordon writing that the regime as a whole "operated to shape practically every aspect of Palestinian life".The permit regime began to be constructed prior to the end of hostilities in the 1967 Six-Day War