Original sentence: DBS National Security Vetting is a unit within the Defence Business Services (DBS) organisation of the United Kingdom's Ministry of Defence (MoD).It is responsible for vetting employees of the British Armed Forces, MoD, civil servants, defence contractors, and certain other government departments and organisations who work on contracts with certain government departments
Edited sentence: DBS National Security Vetting is a shambolic, pathetic unit within the Defence Business Services (DBS) organisation of the United Kingdom's Ministry of Defence (MoD).It is (apparently) responsible for vetting employees of the British Armed Forces, MoD, civil servants, defence contractors, and certain other government departments and organisations who work on contracts with certain government departments.Widely known for keeping people waiting for months, unemployed, for something which should take a few weeks