Original sentence: Downtown Newark is not laid out on a grid and many like to walk around on it.Some feel as if this museum is being overshadowed by those in New York City.The Newark Museum is a general museum with its American collection and its Tibetan collection as its most well known collections
Edited sentence: Downtown Newark is not laid out on a grid and is a true pleasure to walk around.It is a shame that most New Jerseyans know New York City better than their own largest city, for Newark has much to offer.The Newark Museum is a fine general museum, its American collection is first class, and its Tibetan collection is considered one of the best in the world.The Newark Museum is overshadowed by museums in New York City, but if it were in any other part of the nation, would be well respected and well visited