Original sentence: Bill Wallis (attended 1948-1955), actor and satirist (head boy in his final year).Jeffrey Tate (attended 1954-1961), conductor (head boy in his final year)
Edited sentence: Alfred Dryland CBE, County Engineer for Middlesex from 1920, notably for Twickenham Bridge, Chiswick Bridge, the Barnet bypass, Western Avenue, Great West Road, and the North Circular Road.Bill Wallis (attended 1948-55), actor and satirist (head boy in his final year).Charles Judd CBE, Director General of the United Nations Association UK from 1945-64.Cyril Garbett (briefly), Archbishop of York from 1942-55.David Lea, Baron Lea of Crondall OBE, trade union official.Dr Jeffrey Tate CBE (attended 1954-61), conductor (head boy in his final year) of the Hamburger Symphoniker from 2009.George Sturt, author.Hugh Johns, ITV football commentator.Jack Gwillim, actor.James Kendall, Professor Chemistry at the University of Edinburgh from 1928-59, and President of the Royal Society of Edinburgh from 1949-54.Lt-Gen Sir Harold Redman CB CBE, Governor of Gibraltar from 1955-8.Maj-Gen Alexander Elmslie CB CBE, Colonel Commandant of the Royal Army Service Corps (RASC) from 1964-5, and the Royal Corps of Transport from 1964-9.Maj-Gen Roy Wood, Chairman of the Association for Geographic Information from 1996-7, and President of the Photogrammetric Society (now the Remote Sensing and Photogrammetry Society) from 1993-5.Prof Charles Rees CBE, Hofmann Professor of Organic Chemistry at Imperial College London from 1978-83, and President of the Royal Society of Chemistry from 1992-4.Prof David Watkin, Professor of History of Architecure from 2001-8 at the University of Cambridge.Prof Peter Morice, Professor of Civil Engineering at the University of Southampton from 1958-91.Prof Roy Roberts CBE, President of the Institution of Mechanical Engineers from 1989-90, former President for the Faraday Society and Society of Chemical Industry, and known for the Rideal-Walker coefficient.Professor Ernest Braude, Professor of Organic Chemistry at Imperial College London from 1955-6.Sir Eric Rideal MBE (briefly), chemist, Professor of Colloid Science at the University of Cambridge from 1930-46.Squadron Leader Sydney Wiltshire, awarded the George Cross