Original sentence: He recorded his interactions in a hand written diary, including coloured illustrations of aspects of contemporary West African life along the river, such as this drawing of a brass canoe fitted with an awning and armed with cannons, used for local trade along the river
Edited sentence: He recorded his interactions in a hand written diary, including coloured illustrations of fascinating aspects of contemporary West African life along the river, such as this drawing of a brass canoe fitted with an awning and armed with cannons, used for local trade along the river