Original sentence: Warren Dayton’s work was selected many times for juried showcase awards publications, including Society of Illustrators of Los Angeles 2009 Certificate of Merit and show annual publication Illustration West  (3 inclusions: 2009 certificate and gallery for "Illustration West 47", 2008 “Illustration West 46” and  Illustration West 1966”, see reference below), Graphis - The International Journal of Visual Communication (5 inclusions magazine and annual, 1966-1972), Communication Arts Magazine and Annual (2 times inclusion), the Los Angeles Art Director's Club Show and the The New York Art Director’s Club
Edited sentence: Warren Dayton’s work was selected many times for juried showcase awards publications, including Society of Illustrators of Los Angeles 2009 Certificate of Merit and show annual publication Illustration West  (3 inclusions: 2009 certificate and gallery for "Illustration West 47", 2008 “Illustration West 46” and  Illustration West 46”, see reference below), Graphis - The International Journal of Visual Communication (5 inclusions magazine and annual, 1966-1972), Communication Arts Magazine and Annual (2 times inclusion), the Los Angeles Art Director's Club Show and the The New York Art Director’s Club