Original sentence: With attention squarely focused on domestic matters, Van der Vaart led his troops out of the danger zone with a series of victories over Bayern Munich, Werder Bremen and FC Schalke 04; riding Van der Vaart's wave of form through to the end of the season, Hamburg finished in seventh place, and in so doing achieved the unthinkable by qualifying for Europe for another season
Edited sentence: With attention squarely focused on domestic matters, Van der Vaart slowly but surely led his troops out of the danger zone with a series of stunning victories over Bayern Munich, Werder Bremen and FC Schalke 04; riding Van der Vaart's wave of form through to the end of the season, Hamburg finished in seventh place, and in so doing achieved the unthinkable by qualifying for Europe for yet another season.he is been linked with real madrid