Original sentence: Don Caneva, prestigious third generation band director/conductor/music editor/festival founder.Hersey Bands were founded by the internationally renowned band director Don Caneva
Edited sentence: Don Caneva, internationally renowned, third generation band director/conductor/music editor/festival founder/band music education visionary.During Caneva's 10 year reign at Hersey his bands brought home an unprecedented over 100 first place awards.Hersey Bands were founded by the internationally renowned band director & band music education visionary Don Caneva