Original sentence: After graduating from Yale Law School in 1942, Vance served in the Navy as a gunnery officer on the destroyer USS Hale until 1946 and then joined the law firm Simpson Thacher & Bartlett in New York City before entering entering government servic.In 1993, he was awarded the United States Military Academy's Sylvanus Thayer Award
Edited sentence: After graduating from Yale Law School in 1942, Vance served in the Navy as a gunnery officer on the destroyer USS Hale until 1946 and then joined the prestigious law firm Simpson Thacher & Bartlett in New York City  before entering the government.In 1993, he was awarded the prestigious United States Military Academy's Sylvanus Thayer Award