Original sentence: Further up the hillside from the school is 'The Sheep Dip', an outdoor pool, once a real sheep dip, but converted and recently refurbished.It is home to Knighton House School for girls, a  prep school home to around 100 girls in red dungarees and Durweston CE VA Primary School
Edited sentence: Further up the hillside from the school is 'The Sheep Dip', a beautiful outdoor pool, once a real sheep dip, but converted and recently refurbished.It is home to Knighton House School for girls, a picturesque prep school home to around 100 girls in red dungarees and Durweston CE VA Primary School