Original sentence: "  Sheriff Doug Gillespie negotiated with Cliven Bundy, newly confirmed BLM director, Neil Kornze,  elected to deescalate the situation and released the cattle.On April 12, a group of protesters, some of whom were armed advanced on what the BLM described as a "cattle gather" and what Republican representative Steve Stockman described as a "paramilitary raid
Edited sentence: On April 12, a group of protesters, some of whom were armed advanced on what was described by Republican representative Steve Stockman a "paramilitary raid" by the BLM.Sheriff Doug Gillespie negotiated with Cliven Bundy, newly confirmed BLM director, Neil Kornze,  elected to deescalate the situation and released the cattle