Original sentence: On September 15, 2001, at the age of 15, returning from a commemoration ceremony honoring the September 11 attacks victims, Clapp passed out drunk on a railroad track near his home in Arroyo Grande, California
Edited sentence: On September 15, 2001, at the age of 15, returning from a commemoration ceremony honoring the September 11 attacks victims, where he had consumed a considerable amount alcohol, Clapp has no recollection of passing out on a railroad track near his home in Arroyo Grande, California