Original sentence: His initial games in the 2008 NAB Pre-Season Cup showed the players had adapted well to the new broom.Knights is well placed to develop this group, as stated above, he coached many during his 3 years with VFL affliate Bendigo Bombers.The re-building process will take time, as this playing group are young and need to develop their skills
Edited sentence: A team that was at worst competitive in the previous two years, with similar injury issues, has turned into a rabble, with a very definite chance at the club's first wooden spoon in 75 years.After his initial games in the 2008 NAB Pre-Season Cup suggested the players had adapted well to the new broom, as the season progresses Knights has looked out of his depth, refusing to coach to the conditions and showing a stubborn disregard for anything related to defensive football.It appears the longer he coaches that, much like his inability to coach a team to the finals in either of his two previous senior coaching roles, that he is demoralising a young list, and coaching nothing more than the losing philosophy and mentality that dogged the Richmond teams he was part of, and continues to breed in his old club