Original sentence: After receiving his Bachelor of Arts at the University of Manitoba in Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada,  Scheffel went on to a Master of Arts at Memorial University in St.His doctorate was achieved at Hamilton, Ontario's McMaster University, with a thesis on the aforementioned Old Believers
Edited sentence: After receiving his BA degree at the University of Manitoba in Winnipeg, Manitoba, Canada,  Scheffel went on to an MA degree at Memorial University in St.His PhD degree was achieved at Hamilton, Ontario's McMaster University, with a thesis on the aforementioned Old Believers