Original sentence: Many metal fans criticise the group as "sell outs" due to the constant evolving of their their music.Some claim it has been deliberatly changed to appeal to a wider audience, and it is that change that has brought them coverage by Kerrang and MTV and in turn, a more mainstream and commercial image
Edited sentence: Many metal fans criticise the group as "sell outs" due to the fact that their music has been changed to appeal to a wider audience has brought them coverage by Kerrang and MTV and in turn, a more mainstream and commercial image