Original sentence: For some time afterwards, Leonardo and the others were kept under observation by Florence's Officers of the Night - a kind of Renaissance vice squad, charged with suppressing the practice of sodomy, which a majority of male Florentines engaged in, as shown by surviving legal records of the Podestá and the Officers of the Night
Edited sentence: For some time afterwards, Leonardo and the other men accused of the crime were kept under observation by Florence's "Officers of the Night" - a kind of Renaissance vice squad, a group charged with trying to reduce the practice of sodomy amongst the city's male population, a practice a considerable part of the Toscan population is said to have been engaged in at the time