Original sentence: A point supported by the fact that the German leadership believed in fair and just conditions of a peace treaty, based upon Woodrow Wilson's 14 Points.As a result of the treaty, Germany's territory instead reduced by a third, the Rhineland was demilitarized and Allied troops were to occupy many areas.Instead, the war had killed 1,770,000 German soldiers and 760,000 German civilians, devastated the economy, and caused the losses in both territory and national sovereignty.Many who believed in the utter invincibility of the army asserted that the statesmen who had signed the Treaty of Versailles were traitors, and that victory would have eventually come otherwise.Moreover, the Weimar Republic under Friedrich Ebert violently suppressed workers' uprisings with the help of the Reichswehr and tolerated the paramilitary Freikorps forming all across Germany.No Allied soldiers had stepped foot on German soil, and German troops stood in fact before Paris in the West, and had signed the Peace of Brest-Litovsk with Russia in the East.The treaty became enormously unpopular in Germany, in no small part because it impinged extensively on internal German sovereignty.There were also enormous war reparations to be paid for a period of 70 years (until 1988)
Edited sentence: As a result of the treaty, Germany's territory was reduced, the Rhineland was demilitarized and Allied troops were to patrol the area.Instead, the war had killed 1,770,000 German soldiers and 760,000 German civilians, devastated the economy, and caused the losses in both territory and national soverieignty.Moreover, the Weimar Republic under Friedrich Ebert violently suppressed workers' uprisings with the help of the Reichswehr and tolerated the terror of the paramilitary Freikorps forming all across Germany.Since no Allied soldiers had stepped foot on German soil, many who believed in the utter invincibility of the army asserted that the statesmen who had signed the Treaty of Versailles were traitors, and that victory would have eventually come otherwise.The treaty became enormously unpopular in Germany, in no small part because it impinged extensively on internal German affairs.There were also war reparations to be paid