Original sentence: " Apparently, Orked's father, Pak Atan had diabetic complications and the whole family, with their maid, Kak Yam, and chauffeur, Anuar, inclusive, frantically rushed him to the hospital.Alan was divorced from his Singaporean wife in this story and had his six year-old daughter in his custody.Meanwhile, Temah went for blood tests at a polyclinic and discovered that she had contracted the HIV virus.The finale of the story sees Alan's parents reconcilating after years of quarrels and fights by praying together before a Chinese altar and Alan and his daughter performing their solemn vows in a church.The story plot of Gubra is set a few years after Orked's romance with Jason, where she is married to Ariff, a man who is very much older than herself
Edited sentence: "  Apparently, Orked's father, Pak Atan, had diabetic complications and the whole family, with their maid, Kak Yam, and chauffeur, Anuar, inclusive, frantically rushed him to the hospital.Alan was divorced from his Singaporean wife in this story and had his six-year-old daughter in his custody.Meanwhile, Temah went for blood tests at a polyclinic and discovered that she had contracted the HI virus.The finale of the story sees Alan's parents reconciling after years of quarrels and fights by praying together before a Chinese altar and Alan and his daughter performing their solemn vows in a church.The story plot of Gubra is set a few years after Orked's romance with Jason, where she is married to Ariff, a man who is very much older than her