Original sentence: In January 2014, an unauthorized biography of Ailes was published by a New York Observer reporter, Gabriel Sherman, entitled: The Loudest Voice in the Room: How the Brilliant, Bombastic Roger Ailes Built Fox News--and Divided a Country.It was discredited by some as poorly written and ill-conceived
Edited sentence: In January 2014, an unauthorized biography of Ailes, discredited by some as poorly written and ill-conceived, though drawing the attention of rival news media and network newscasts, was published by a New York Observer reporter, Gabriel Sherman, entitled: The Loudest Voice in the Room: How the Brilliant, Bombastic Roger Ailes Built Fox News--and Divided a Country