Original sentence: Furiously searching the upstairs, she discovers the girls but does not recognize Randy as a girl until she runs.One girl is supportive (if confused), but the other two are hostile to the idea: not only is Evie now gay, but, one notes in disgust, “God, Evie, if you were gonna turn gay you could at least chose someone who’s pretty.Randy and Evie start passing notes in school and hanging out with each other, though Evie does not reveal this to her cliquish friends.Rebecca threatens Frank until, intimidated and panicked, he turns over Evie’s phone number.When Evie’s mother leaves on a business trip, the girls take the opportunity to cook a huge, many-coursed meal, indulging in wine and marijuana.past her on her way out
Edited sentence: Furiously searching the upstairs, she discovers the girls but does not recognize Randy as a girl until she runs past her on her way out.One girl is supportive (if confused), but the other two are hostile to the idea: one of the says, “God, Evie, if you were gonna turn gay you could at least chose someone who’s pretty.Randy and Evie start passing notes in school and hanging out with each other, although Evie does not reveal this to her cliquish friends.Rebecca threatens Frank until, panicked, he turns over Evie’s phone number.When Evie’s mother leaves on a business trip, the girls take the opportunity to cook a huge meal, indulging in wine and marijuana