Original sentence: The war saw a move away from the idea of "business as usual" (the preservation of the status quo) under prime minister, Herbert Henry Asquith, and towards a state of total war (complete state intervention in public affairs) under the next prime minister, David Lloyd George; the first time this had been seen in Britain
Edited sentence: The war saw a move away from the idea of "business as usual" (the preservation of the status quo) under Prime Minister Herbert Henry Asquith, and towards a state of total war (complete state intervention in public affairs) under David Lloyd George; the first time this had been seen in Britain