Original sentence: It was widely criticized, but supported by experts in the field of epidemiology.The Falluja cluster "indicates a point estimate of about 200,000 excess deaths in the 3% of Iraq represented by this cluster", while no confidence interval is given for this point estimate.The authors have called this a conservative estimate, because it excluded "extreme statistical outlier" data from Falluja; If including the outlier Fallujah data, the estimated increased risk of death was 2.5 fold (range of 1.6 to 4.2, 95% CI).The first survey, published on 29 October, 2004, estimated the increased risk of death following the 2003 invasion and subsequent occupation of Iraq to be 1.5 fold (range of 1.1 to 2.3, using a 95% CI, confidence interval) higher than that prior to the invasion, leading to an estimate of an increase in total deaths (combatants plus noncombatants) of 98,000 (range of 8,000 to 194,000, 95% CI) over what would have been expected, had there been no invasion
Edited sentence: It was widely criticized by those with vested interests, but supported by experts in the field of epidemiology.The Falluja cluster "indicates a point estimate of about 200,000 excess deaths.The authors have called this a conservative estimate, because it excluded "extreme statistical outlier" data from Falluja; If including the outlier Fallujah data, the estimated increased risk of death was 2.5 fold (95% confidence interval: 1.6 to 4.2).The first survey, published on 29 October, 2004 estimated the increased risk of death following the 2003 invasion and subsequent occupation of Iraq to be 1.5 fold (95% confidence interval: 1.1 to 2.3) higher than that prior to the invasion, leading to an estimate of an increase in total deaths (combatants plus noncombatants) of 98,000 (95% confidence interval: 8,000 to 194,000) over what would have been expected, had there been no invasion.in the 3% of Iraq represented by this cluster", while no confidence interval is given for this point estimate