Original sentence: Draco is described as a tall, slender boy with a pale, pointed face, sleek blond hair, and ice grey eyes
Edited sentence: Draco is described as a tall, slender boy with a pale, pointed face, sleek blond hair, and ice grey, mercury-like eyes.However, Draco was mostly pressured into being a snobbish bully by his dickhead of a father, Lucius Malfoy.Lucius was a death eater and pressured Draco into doing horrible stuff, so he is a highly misunderstood character and should be forgiven for all the things he did wrong.Therefore, Draco was mostly pressured into being a snobbish bully by his dickhead of a father, Lucius Malfoy