Original sentence: It is a web-based system that puts the teacher in charge of the lesson, and is designed to provide the tools and resources the teacher needs to ensure smooth operation of the the class.Its approach contrasts with ideas and techniques used in the 1950s to prepare students for careers in factory-like atmospheres.The digital teaching platform is designed for 21st century K–12 classrooms.The platform functions as the primary instructional environment in a classroom with a 1:1 student-computer ratio
Edited sentence: It is a web-based system that puts the teacher in charge of the lesson, and it provides the tools and resources the teacher needs to ensure the class runs smoothly.The children in the educational systems in the United States are failing to grow with the ever changing world of technology.The digital teaching platform is designed for the K–12 classroom.The ideas and techniques that worked in the 1950s to prepare students for careers in factory-like atmospheres are no longer acceptable for the digital learners that are craving twenty-first century careers.The platform functions as the primary instructional environment in a 1:1 computing classroom.This is based on the lack of growth in the way they are taught