Original sentence: During 1959, Walker was in Singapore policing that city's first post-colonial elections.During the Second World War Walker fought against the Japanese in the jungle warfare of the Burma campaign, during which he became ill and lost a great deal of weight.During the rest of the decade he orchestrated "punitive operations" against tribesman of the North West Frontier in India.During this period, Walker was promoted to the rank of Major General.From 1962, Walker commanded Commonwealth forces in Brunei and Borneo, during the Confrontation with Indonesia.He ordered his men to get to know the city intimately, in order to deal with "screeching mobs".He was promoted to Colonel and in 1948 was saw service against Communist rebels in Malaya, when they attacked British-owned plantations during the Malayan Emergency.Walker lambasted the British Labour Party for not banning the Malayan Communist Party.Walker then went to Sandhurst and in 1933 joined his grandfather's regiment, the 1/8th Gurkha Rifles
Edited sentence: After successfully overseeing the election there he was then (1962) stationed in Brunei and Borneo to fight Indonesian attempts to conquer it.During 1959 whilst Walker was in Singapore policing that city's first post-colonial elections he ordered the soldiers under his command to know the city intimately in order to deal with the "screeching mobs".During the Second World War Walker fought against the Japanese in Burma where he became ill and thin in the jungle.During the rest of the decade he orchestrated "punitive operations" against tribesman of the North West Frontier in India and it was here guarding the border he gained his suspicion of the Soviet Union.He then went to Sandhurst and then in 1933 Walker joined his grandfather's regiment, the 1/8th Gurkha Rifles.It was during this time Walker was promoted to the rank of major-general.Nevertheless he was promoted to Colonel and in 1948 was posted to Malaya to help defeat the Communist rebels which had attacked British rubber plantations.Walker (correctly) blamed Chinese Communists for "infiltrating" trade unions and lambasted the British Labour Party for not banning the Malayan Communist Party