Original sentence: He was also a part-time singer in "unplugged" cafes prior to the competition.He worked part time in a computer shop  in Prangin Mall, Penang.However, the music student from University Sains Malaysia has proven his talent in playing various musical instruments such as the violin, guitar and piano.There were minor disagreements surrounding Daniel's victory as the Malaysian Idol as some viewers claim that his looks brought him the victory
Edited sentence: CG Computers.He was also a part-time singer in unplugged cafes before joining the competition.He worked part time in CG Computers, taking care of their AppleCorner in Prangin Mall, Penang.However the music student from University Sains Malaysia has shown he has talent in playing various musical instruments such as the violin, guitar and piano.There were many disagreements surrounding Daniel's victory as the Malaysian Idol as some fans of the show argued that it was his looks that brought him the victory