Original sentence: Beresford says in his book : "Pretending that the traditional use of " corrective " lenses is safe and effective is no longer acceptable.It uses the Bates method "merged" with modern theories of brain funtion, character and responsibility for one’s self and state of being.Natural Vision Improvement markets itself as a lifestyle method of improving eyesight by wholistic means without the use of optical devices.Some authors agree with Bates regarding the possibility of improving eyesight naturally
Edited sentence: Beresford says in his book : Pretending that the traditional use of " corrective " lenses is safe and effective is no longer acceptable.Many agree with Bates regarding the possibility of improving eyesight naturally.Natural Vision Improvement is a lifestyle method of improving eyesight by wholistic means without the use of optical devices.The Bates method merged with modern theories of brain funtion, character and responsibility for one’s self and state of being