Original sentence: Between Tanabe and Shirahama is a little-known  temple called Kinkakuji (not to be confused with the famous Kinkakuji in Kyoto).There is a bridge to a nearby island called Motoshima.There is a district with many bars in front of the train station
Edited sentence: Between Tanabe and Shirahama is a little-known but beautiful temple called Kinkakuji (not to be confused with the famous Kinkakuji in Kyoto).There is a bridge to a nearby island called Motoshima, and on the far side of the island is a great cliff for jumping off into the sea, you really ought to go try it sometime.There is a district with an amazing number of tiny bars in front of the train station