Original sentence: Puppini started playing the piano aged 5, and dreamed of becoming an opera singer.Then, during her successful jazz singing career Marcella found herself irresistibly drawn towards the alternative performance art scene
Edited sentence: However, her true love was always music.She started playing the piano aged 5, and dreamed of becoming an opera singer.Then, while enjoying quite a successful jazz singing career Marcella found herself irresistibly drawn towards the alternative performance art scene