Original sentence: The length of the story arc coupled with the series' bimonthly schedule made it difficult for readers to keep characters and subplots fresh in their memories, but Jungle Action nonetheless maintained passable if modest sales and was popular with the desirable college student demographic
Edited sentence: More importantly, the series was popular with the desirable college student demographic.The length of the story arc coupled with the series's bimonthly schedule made it difficult for readers to keep characters and subplots fresh in their memory, but Jungle Action nonetheless maintained passable if modest sales