Original sentence: The condition of those left under Bolshevik rule as a result of the Treaty was would be later marked by forced collectivistion, Stalinist terror, exiles to Siberia, purges, and most infamous, the Famine of 1933, a massive famine, believed by many to be artificially made by the Stalin regime in which approximately 3,5 million Soviets (mostly Ukrainian) perished.The same territories were coveted by others — from younger nations struggling to secede (such as Ukraine, Belarus, and the Baltics), to more powerful neighbours minded neighbours like the Soviet Union — desiring lands previously controlled by the Russian Empire.This practice was also the norm in  Romania and Czechoslovakia, the other two states in which ethnic minorities constituted between over a quarter and one third of their respective populations.Ukrainians and Belarusians found themselves without a province of their own, and some Poles also found themselves within the borders of the Soviet Union
Edited sentence: The condition of those left under Bolshevik rule as a result of the Treaty was on the other hand marked by Sovietization, Soviet terror, communism, exiles to Siberia, religious persecution and most infamous, the Holodomor, a massive famine, believed by many to be artificially made by Soviet government in which millions of Ukrainians perished, in what is alleged to be a genocide.The same territories were coveted by others — from younger nations struggling for independence (such as Ukraine, Belarus, Lithuania and Latvia), to more imperialist-minded neighbours like the Soviet Union — desiring lands previously controlled by the Russian Empire.Ukrainians and Belarusians found themselves without a state of their own, and some Poles also found themselves within the borders of the Soviet Union