Original sentence: Supporters of the Patriot Act claim that these provisions are necessary in fighting the War on Terrorism, while its detractors argue that the sections of Title II infringe upon individual rights and shift the United States toward being a police state
Edited sentence: Supporters of the Patriot Act claim that these provisions are necessary in fighting the War on Terrorism, while its detractors argue that the sections of Title II inordinately infringe upon individual rights and shift the United States toward being a police state