Original sentence: After leaving school he worked as an apprentice grocer in Sligo Town.As the fierce gun battle developed the third car arrived on the other side of the cart and began firing with rifles and machine-guns on the now exposed would-be assassins.Dan Breen was helped onto his bike by Paddy Daly who helped him to a safehouse in Phibsboro' area, where he was attended to by the captain of the Dublin hurling team, Dr.Martin F.On December 19 1919 he was killed during a gun battle after an ambush at Ashtown, near the  border of County Meath and County Dublin, during the early stages of the Irish War of Independence (also known as the Tan War)
Edited sentence: After leaving school he worked as an apprentice grocer in Sligo Town before committing himself to the fight for Irish Independence.As the fierce gun battle developed the third car arrived on the other side of the cart and began firing with rifles and machine-guns on the now exposed Volunteers.Dan Breen was helped onto his bike by Paddy Daly who helped him to a safehouse in Phibsboro' area, where he was attended to by the captain of the Dublin hurling team, Dr J.On December 19, 1919 he was killed during a gun battle after an ambush at Ashtown, near the  border of County Meath and County Dublin, during the early stages of the Irish War of Independence (also known as the Tan War).Volunteer Martin F.Within republican circles he was known as a shy, slim built, handsome Sligonian who was a popular and trusted comrade especially amongest the likes of Dan Breen, Sean Tracy and Sean Hogan