Original sentence: Power noise  (also known as rhythmic noise) takes its inspiration from some of the more structured and distorted early industrial acts, such as Esplendor Geométrico.Referring to these acts as "industrial", however, may be met with hostility from some in the industrial scene.While not considered industrial music by many who perceive excessive commercial and pop influences, industrial rock acts were commonplace within industrial magazines, on industrial music compilations, and as opening acts at industrial concerts
Edited sentence: Power Noise  (also known as rhythmic noise) takes its inspiration from some of the more structured and distorted early industrial acts, such as Esplendor Geométrico.Today, however, referring to these acts as "industrial" may be met with hostility from some in the industrial scene.While not considered industrial music by today's standards due to perceived commercial and pop influences, industrial rock acts were once commonplace within industrial magazines, on industrial music compilations, and as opening acts at industrial concerts