Original sentence: As with many others of his generation, enrolment in college protected him from being drafted to fight in the Vietnam War Through the University's Hinckley Institute of Politics, he got an internship with the Utah Republican Party
Edited sentence: As with many others of his generation, enrolment in college protected him from being drafted to fight in the Vietnam War.Through the University's Hinckley Institute of Politics, he got an internship with the Utah Republican Party