Original sentence: Also Charlie Brooks appeard as a guest star on the Radio 1 Chart Show on the 12th of July 2009 the show lasted from 3:00pm untill 7:00pm during her time on the show she answerd questions from fans on the radio
Edited sentence: Also Charlie Brooks appeard as a guest star on the Radio 1 Chart Show on the 12th of July 2009 the show lasted from 3:00pm until 7:00pm during her time on the show she answerd questions from fans on the radio