Original sentence: Animals on fur-farms are fed excess products from production of beef, fish and poultry.Fur farming is therefore considered a good conservation practice.Opponents of fur farming state that, as with other large scale animal farms, the methods used on fur factory farms are designed to maximize profits.This practice reduces the effects of environmentally damaging waste produced in this food industries.Today, eighty-five percent of the fur industry’s skins come from animals living captive on fur farms.[1,2]
Edited sentence: Opponents of fur farming state that, as with other intensive-confinement animal farmsc, the methods used on fur factory farms are designed to maximize profits.Today, eighty-five percent of the fur industry’s skins come from animals living captive on fur factory farms