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Edited sentence: A father takes care of his baby girl (curiously nicknamed "the Bug") and thinks about his childhood, wife, and newly-acquired fatherhood.And they are monsters, packed with adjective-rich descritpions, complex structure, and just enough information to make you vaguely uncomfortable.His mind goes off on tangents, exemplified in the length of the sentences.Nicholson Baker's second book is one giant ramble.This guy is just weird--incredibly well-read and articulate, but content to discuss the history of the comma and the relation of nose-picking to marital bliss.[ Room Temperature on J-Walk].[Room Temperature Quotes]