Original sentence: Beck has been criticized for failing to mention her current sexual orientation in the book, which purports to explain her sexuality; for her portrayal of Latter-Day Saints and Utah culture; and for her accusations against her father and others, allegations which are not only serious in nature but which in at least some cases appear to be provably false- for example, that sex abuse in Mormon families far exceeds any other group, and that Brigham Young University systematically removed all mention of Equal Rights Amendment activist Sonia Johnson from its huge campus library
Edited sentence: Beck has been criticized for failing to mention her current sexual orientation in the book, which purports to explain her sexuality; for her extreme or even outlandish portrayal of Latter-Day Saints and Utah culture; and for her extreme accusations against her father and others, allegations which are not only serious in nature but which in at least some cases appear to be provably false (undermining the book's claims of truthfulness)—for example, that the LDS Church's leadership maintains a "death squad...to deal with malcontents", that sex abuse in Mormon families far exceeds any other group, and that Brigham Young University systematically removed all mention of Equal Rights Amendment activist Sonia Johnson from its huge campus library