Original sentence: The second opener was the Psyclone Rangers, an inspired local band led by rock critic and Phawker Editor-in-Chief: Jonathan Valania, that covered the Dream Syndicate - but at least they wrote most of their own songs
Edited sentence: The second opener was the Psyclone Rangers, an uninspired local band [led by rock critic and Phawker Editor-in-Chief Jonathan Valania] that thought they were clever for covering the Dream Syndicate - but at least they wrote most of their own songs