Original sentence: He had graduated from Harvard College in 1969.He was responsible for the first appearances of two characters that would appear in Animal House – Larry Kroger and Mandy Pepperidge.The antics of the Alphas became the inspiration for the Delta Tau Chis of Animal House.They made their debut in National Lampoon’s High School Yearbook, a satire published in 1975
Edited sentence: He had graduated from Harvard College in 1969 and had the kind of resume that the Omegas would have envied but, like the Deltas, he had a wicked sense of humor (he could fit his entire fist in his mouth).He was also responsible for the first appearances of two characters that would appear in Animal House – Larry Kroger and Mandy Pepperidge.The debauched antics of the Alphas became the inspiration for the Delta Tau Chis of Animal House.They made their debut in National Lampoon’s High School Yearbook, a dead-on satirical send-up of every yearbook that ever was, published in 1975