Original sentence: After Hurricane Katrina struck the Gulf Coast in August 2005, several Louisiana residents, many of whom were African Americans from New Orleans, left the state and never returned.Census, Louisiana has been experiencing changing demographics that seems to benefit the Republicans.Nevertheless, Louisiana is becoming a red state as was solidified by the comfortable margin enjoyed by John McCain in 2008
Edited sentence: After Hurricane Katrina struck the Gulf Coast in August 2005, several Louisiana residents, many of whom were African Americans from New Orleans, left the state and have yet to return.All told, Louisiana is rapidly turning into a red state as was solidified by the comfortable margin enjoyed by John McCain in 2008.Census, Louisiana has been experiencing changing demographics that seems to benefit the Republicans, especially since Hurricane Katrina led a large number of black voters to leave the state