Original sentence: According to the film, at the age of 16, Amish youth are allowed to depart from many of the Amish rules, though the scholarship on the subject does not support this view of a normative rumspringa.Many drive cars, get jobs, have romantic and sexual relationships, and most experiment with tobacco, alcohol, and drugs.One Amish youth whom the film follows, Faron – a preacher's son – even turns to drug dealing to satisfy his habit.The film follows Amish teenagers in LaGrange County, Indiana who enter the "English World" before making the adult commitment to become baptised as adults in the Amish community.The non-Amish world is referred to in the film as "the Devil's Playground" (though there is no evidence that the term is in circulation among the Amish)
Edited sentence: According to the film, at the age of 16, Amish youth are allowed to depart from many of the Amish rules and for the first time in their lives, though the scholarship on the subject does not support this view of a normative rumspringa.Many drive cars, get jobs, have romantic and sexual relationships, and most experiment with smoking, partying, alcohol, and drugs.One Amish youth that the film follows, Faron – a preacher's son – even turns to drug dealing to satisfy his habit.The film follows Amish teenagers in LaGrange County, Indiana who enter the "English World" to decide whether they will be baptised as adults in the Amish community.They deal with problems in the outside world, which the Amish refer to as "the Devil's Playground," that do not exist in their home communities, including alcohol and drugs