Original sentence: Hall arrived in Sydney on 14 February 1852 and prospected for gold in Victoria with little success.Walter Russell Hall (1831 – 13 October, 1911) was an Australian businessman, born in Kington, Herefordshire, England
Edited sentence: Hall was born in Kington, Herefordshire, England, eldest son of Walter Hall, glover (later a miller), and his wife Elizabeth Carleton, née Skarratt.Hall was educated in Kington and Taunton, Somerset arrived in Sydney on 14 February 1852 with little money and prospected for gold in Victoria with little success.Walter Russell Hall (22 February 1831 – 13 October 1911) was an Australian businessman and benefactor