Original sentence: Other notable peaks include Mount Timpanogos, a massive peak which looms over Provo, Utah; Lone Peak, Mount Olympus, the (Salt Lake) Twin Peaks, which overlook Salt Lake City; and Ben Lomond just north of Ogden, Utah.The densely-vegetated narrow canyons of the Wasatch Range such as Big Cottonwood Canyon and Little Cottonwood Canyon are heavily visited; on September 25, 2005, 1,200 automobiles entered Little Cottonwood within one hour
Edited sentence: Other notable peaks include Mount Tympanogos, a massive peak which looms over Provo, Utah; Lone Peak, Mount Olympus, the (Salt Lake) Twin Peaks, which overlook Salt Lake City; and Ben Lomond just north of Ogden, Utah.The densley vegetated narrow canyons of the Wasatch Range such as Big Cottonwood Canyon and Little Cottonwood Canyon are heavily visited, on September 25, 2005, 1,200 automobiles entered Little Cottonwood within one hour