Original sentence: Jane Mayer, author of The Dark Side: The Inside Story of How The War on Terror Turned into a War on American Ideals, heavily criticized Courting Disaster in a book review, claiming it is "based on a series of slipshod premises"
Edited sentence: Jane Mayer, author of The Dark Side: The Inside Story of How The War on Terror Turned into a War on American Ideals, a book which Thiessen says has fundamental errors of fact, heavily criticized Courting Disaster in a book review, claiming it is "based on a series of slipshod premises"