Original sentence: Andy Giles is painter, photographer, filmmaker, videographer, World War II historian, documentarian, and lecturer, Reed Art Gallery director.Andy Palmer 1980 Olympic Trials Marathon Runner.Brian Woodworth Pitcher for the Kansas City Royals Baseball Organization.Caroline Gentile Field Hockey player, a nationally known educator in the field of Health, Physical Education and Recreation.Cathie Pelletier Novelist of Candles on Bay Street, Dancing at the Harvest Moon, Running the Bulls and won the 2006 Paterson Prize for Fiction.James "Chico" Hernandez USA National Champion, FIAS World Cup Vice-Champion in Sombo wrestling, featured on a box of Wheaties.John Lisnik served in the Maine House of Representatives.John Tuttle served in the Maine House of Representatives.Karol L'Heureux  Head Volleyball Coach for 28 seasons at University of New England.Mabel Desmond served four terms in the Maine House of Representatives, from 1994 to 2002.Peter Fields Athletic Director of Intercollegiate Athletics Montana State University.Romey Pelletier an Greco-Roman Wrestler alternate on the U
Edited sentence: Andy Giles: painter, photographer, filmmaker, videographer, World War II historian; director, Reed Art Gallery.Andy Palmer: 1980 Olympic Trials Marathon Runner.Brian Woodworth: minor-league baseball pitcher in the Kansas City Royals organization, 1979-80.Caroline Gentile: field Hockey player, and a nationally-known educator in the field of Health, Physical Education and Recreation.Cathie Pelletier: novelist (Candles on Bay Street, Dancing at the Harvest Moon, Running the Bulls); won the 2006 Paterson Prize for Fiction.James "Chico" Hernandez: USA National Champion, FIAS World Cup Vice-Champion in Sombo wrestling, featured on a box of Wheaties.Joe C.John Lisnik: served in the Maine House of Representatives.John Tuttle: also served in the Maine House of Representatives.Karol L'Heureux: Head Volleyball Coach for 28 seasons at University of New England.Mabel Desmond: served four terms in the Maine House of Representatives, from 1994 to 2002.Peter Fields: Athletic Director, Montana State University.Romey Pelletier: Greco-Roman wrestler, alternate on the U.Schweinbagel: political scientist and blogger