Original sentence: Pilot: January 26, 1994: A fat, ugly, lonely film critic named Jay Sherman gets a second chance at love when a gorgeous actress named Valerie Fox falls for him, but it may all to pieces if Jay doesn't give Valerie a glowing review for her latest movie, the Basic Instinct-inspired erotic thriller, Kiss of Death
Edited sentence: Pilot: January 26, 1994: A fat, ugly, lonely film critic named Jay Sherman gets a second chance at love when a gorgeous actress named Valerie Fox falls for him, but it may all go to pieces if Jay doesn't give Valerie a glowing review for her latest movie, the Basic Instinct-inspired erotic thriller, Kiss of Death