Original sentence: During 2008 there were multiple notable attacks on Indian students inluding, Sukhraj Singh, a 23 year old catering student who had graduated from Brighton Institute of Technology was assaulted by five people in the suburb of Sunshine, Melbourne, in December, 2008.There were allegations that police were "punching" and "using pressure point tactics" while dragging protesters away, and that they hit a protester's leg with a baton, stomped on another student's chest, and broke anothers thumb
Edited sentence: During 2008 there were multiple notable attacks on Indian students including, Sukhraj Singh, a 23 year old catering student who had graduated from Brighton Institute of Technology was assaulted by five people in the suburb of Sunshine, Melbourne, in December, 2008.There were allegations that police were "punching" and "using pressure point tactics" while dragging protesters away, and that they hit a protester's leg with a baton, stomped on another student's chest, and broke another's thumb