Original sentence: Berkeley has graduated more students who would go on to earn doctorates than any other university in the United States, although proportionally Berkeley has one of the largest student bodies in the nation.The annual football Big Game between the Bears and the Stanford Cardinal is the most important game on Cal's schedule.The oldest campus of the University of California System, Berkeley is considered to be a well respected research institution
Edited sentence: Berkeley has graduated more students who would go on to earn doctorates than any other university in the United States, and its enrollment of National Merit Scholars is third in the nation.The annual football Big Game between the Bears and their rivals the Stanford Cardinal is the most important game on Cal's schedule.The oldest campus of the University of California System, Berkeley is one of the world's leading research universities and has been consistently ranked as one of the top public academic institutions in the world