Original sentence: The Bureau of Inverse Technology have deployed a number of Suicide Boxes containing motion-detecting cameras to monitor suicides on the Golden Gate Bridge and correlate, in real-time, the number of jumpers with the Dow Jones Industrial Index to create their "Despondency Index"
Edited sentence: The Bureau of Inverse Technology have deployed a number of Suicide Boxes containing motion-detecting cameras to monitor suicides on the Golden Gate Bridge and correlate, in real-time, the number of jumpers with the Dow Jones Industrial Index to create their novel, and frighteningly real, Despondency Index