Original sentence: " Two weeks later Steele came back to Sydney and Nations began pre-production by busking their songs on the beach.During this time, Ohad Rein (Old Man River) and Edo Kahn co-wrote the song "Lovers", and shortly after Ohad joined the group.One night after a Sleepy Jacksons' performance in Sydney, Steele and the Kahn brothers were discussing their new side project with John O'Donnell (EMI Australia's Managing Director) who said, "well don't just talk about it, go and record it.Over the next few months, between both bands' touring schedules, the three collaborators got together and continued to put together new songs
Edited sentence: Ohad Rein (Old Man River) and Edo Kahn co-wrote the song "Lovers", and shortly after Ohad joined the group