Original sentence: Deep Run High School's Technology Student Association chapter (TSA) has four members on the State Executive Council.During the dance, the students dance(of course), and participate in different costume themes, games, several AIR-BANDS and even a toga rave at 1:30 a.Each school year, the Drama Department puts on a fall play, a spring musical, and a night of one-act plays in the winter (January or February).It was a huge success when the student body raised over 70,000.These rings are purchased from Herff-Jones, the company that created the Super Bowl rings for the Super Bowl XLI champions
Edited sentence: Although Deep Run is not referred to for its academic proficientness, there is a very extensive curriculum for the few students interested.Due to large financial earnings of those in the area of Deep Run, these rings are able to be purchased from Herff-Jones, the company that created the Super Bowl rings for the Super Bowl XLI champions.During the dance, the students dance (of course), and participate in different costume themes, games, several AIR-BANDS and even an enactment of a drunken toga rave at 1:30 a.Even though Deep Run Drama is by no means close to the best deparment in the county, each school year, the Drama Department puts on a fall play, a spring musical, and a night of one-act plays in the winter (January or February).It already sports a very large, expensive trailer with the Deep Run Marching Wildcats logo painted on the side.It has been reported however, that a fair amount of spectators have fallen asleep during the field show.It was a huge success when the student body raised over $70,000, no doubt attributed to the large amount of funds they have to give away freely.Surprisingly, Deep Run High School's Technology Student Association chapter (TSA) has four members on the State Executive Council.Unfortunately, the arrival of the whole student body brought about unforseen problems such as drug complications within the school and the development of certain stereotypes; it is debatable whether these stereotypes are misplaced