Original sentence: A preliminary health risk assesment stated that the “proposed training will result in no elevated risks for a freshwater system such as the Great Lakes… or generic marine environments using ‘realistic worst case’ assumptions, and further investigation is not recommended.Coast Guard published a notice in the Federal Register that they intended to designate 34 areas in U.If typical rather than worst case assumptions were used the predicted risk would be even less.Under public pressure, the Coast Guard is holding a series of public meetings in nine U.portions of the Great Lakes at least five miles offshore as permanent safety zones for live-fire machine gun practice.”  The Coast Guard has established an information page about their proposal
Edited sentence: Coast Guard published a notice in the Federal Register that they intended to designate 34 areas strung five miles off the shore of all five great lakes as permanent firing ranges for live-fire machine gun practice.The primary objections were 1) the target practice would deposit approximately 6,000 pounds of toxic lead in the lakes each year, 2) the Coast Guard did not prepare an Environmental Impact Statement as required by U.Under public pressure, the Coast Guard held a series of hearings in nine U.law, 3) the target practice would create a safety hazard for boaters, 4) the target practice would unnecessarily militarize the lakes, as no real threat has been articulated