Original sentence: FUCK JANE SCHAFFER
Edited sentence: A quick overview of the default Schaffer paragraph:.Again, it is a good idea to use as many (at least two) feeling, emotional, or connotative words as possible.As a result, she becomes a princess.CM1: Global warming should be man's greatest worry.CM1: This shows that she feels taken advantage of by her selfish stepmother and stepsisters.CM2: This is because the Earth can become negatively and drastically affected world wide.CM2: This is important because her horrible life gives her a present, her fairy godmother.Cinderella leads a miserable life.Closing/Concluding sentence (CS).Commentary (CM).Concrete Detail (CD).For example.For example, she does all the cooking, cleaning, and sewing.Global warming is a world problem and needs to be stopped.If it is not stopped, the world may be drastically hurt.In addition.It closes up the thoughts and gives insight to the next paragraph.It is important that the commentary explain who the concrete detail helps prove the writer's point (the TS).It should be a concrete detail and should start with 'for example' or a different transition.It should be either facts, examples, illustrations, evidence, support, plot references, paraphrases, citations, quotations, plot summary, etc.It usually begins with "As a result" or another concluding sentence.Most commentary sentences start with one of the following transitions:.Note: Some Schaffer paragraphs have one more CD and two more CM's before the CS as follows:.The Concluding Sentence (CS) is the closing sentence that wraps up the TS and sums up the paragraph.There are two or three commentary sentences in each chunk.Therefore, global warming is top priority and cannot be ignored.They contain no facts, rather, comments from the paragraph writer about the fact presented in the CD.This (also) shows that.This is because.This is important because.This sentence contains analysis, interpretation, character feelings, opinions, inference, insight, reasons, or color commentator.This sentence is the "what" sentence and is a fact that shows "what" is happening.This sentence should state the main point of the paragraph and be straight to the point.Topic sentence (TS)