Original sentence: Despite this activity, Elizabeth's death marked a slowing in his productivity - a wealthy man, he chose to lead a life of relative obscurity.He subsequently became one of the young American painters — others were William Merritt Chase, John Henry Twachtman, and Walter Shirlaw — who in the 1870s overturned the traditions of the Hudson River School and started a new art movement characterized by a greater freedom of paint application
Edited sentence: Despite this activity, Elizabeth's death marked a slowing in his productivity; a wealthy man, he chose to lead a life of relative obscurity.He subsequently became one of the young American painters—others were William Merritt Chase, John Henry Twachtman, and Walter Shirlaw—who in the 1870s overturned the traditions of the Hudson River School and started a new art movement characterized by a greater freedom of paint application