Original sentence: During their journey down the river, Charlie, Rose and the African Queen encounter many obstacles, including a German fortress perched on a hilltop near the river (with the drafted native villagers shooting at them) and three sets of rapids
Edited sentence: During their journey down the river, Charlie, Rose and the African Queen encounter many obstacles, including a German fortress perched on a hilltop near the river (with native Askari shooting at them) and three sets of rapids