Original sentence: During his attack on the attacking group he shot the leader of the group and was able to scattering the remaining group.Mills then performed the action for which he was awarded the medal: turning around, back into the wood, from his patrol he engaged the attacking group, delaying them long enough to allow the rest of his patrol to cross the clearing.Wayne Mills was the first recipient of the Conspicuous Gallantry Cross, second only to the Victoria Cross while serving with the 1st Battalion The Duke of Wellington's Regiment.While on UN Service in Bosnia on 29th April 1994, a patrol led by then corporal Mills came under heavy small-arms fire from a group of Bosnian-Serbs
Edited sentence: Corporal Mills then performed an astonishing feat of bravery.Corporal Wayne Mills of the 1st Battalion The Duke of Wellington's Regiment became the first recipient of the Conspicuous Gallantry Cross, second only to the Victoria Cross.Turning round, back into the wood, from his patrol he engaged the attacking group, delaying them long enough to allow the rest of his patrol to cross the clearing.While doing this brave act, Corporal Mills shot the leader of the group, with the rest scattering due to that action.Whilst on UN Service in Bosnia on 29th April 1994, a patrol led by Corporal Mills came under heavy small-arms fire from a group of Bosnian-Serbs