Original sentence: Also in 2004 it was revealed that staff had defrauded the University of millions of dollars.As a result of this indecision, the University continued on it's path of being in the gutter and occassionally claiming to be a star.It did however succeed strongly in a few areas, most notably in hospitality.Western Melbourne is definitely better off for it being there
Edited sentence: Also in 2004 it was revealed that some senior management staff had defrauded the University of millions of dollars.As a result of this indecision, the University continued on it's path of being in the gutter and occasionally claiming to be a star.However, it must be mentioned that the university, like many smaller and newer universities, was regarded as in some cases providing better teaching than could be found at the larger more prestigious universities.It did however succeed strongly in some areas, most notably in hospitality.This lack of popularity was no doubt a product of its being a stupid idea that (i) broadcast an air of desperation to prospective students and their parents, and (ii) involved staff in mountains of unnecessary and complicated meetings and paperwork.Western Melbourne is definitely better off for it being there--if the university was able to maintain a consistent plan, and received only a fraction of the support that universities in more fortunate areas of Melbourne do, it would be able to make an even greater contribution.additoinally, it has had great success in the area of performance, with progressive undergraduate and postgraduate programs in contemporary performance--these are amongst the most radical programs of their type to be found anywhere in the English speaking world