Original sentence: (It is often quite inaccurately compared to the female menopause.) It would perhaps be more reasonable to speak of a steady age-related decline in testosterone levels in men, since men's reproductive systems steadily decline but do not just stop working altogether in mid-life as women's do.It is also not clear how much this supposedly universal male phenomenon can be related to a psychological mid-life crisis and to overall negative bodily changes in mid-life due not only to aging, but also to the accumulated effects of a lack of exericise, poor diet and so on.Its proponents claim it is a biological change experienced by men during their mid-life.The concept of andropause is perhaps more widely accepted in Australia, and some parts of Europe than it is in the United States
Edited sentence: It is also not clear how much this supposed phenomenon can be related to a psychological mid-life crisis.It is arguably a biological change experienced by men during their mid-life, often rather inaccurately compared to the female menopause.It would perhaps be more accurate to speak of a steady age-related decline in testosterone levels in men, since men's reproductive systems do not just stop working in mid-life as women's do.The concept of andropause is more widely accepted in Australia, and Europe than it is in the United States