Original sentence: She always finds her sister weird and when she discovers Cleo's diary she tries to figure out what's going on.She is considered the local princess and is commonly found hanging out with Zane (though he denies that they were ever together).Though she is often the most conscientious and considerate of the girls, at times she can be pedantic and controlling, once even suggesting that she considers chewing a prescribed number of times before swallowing is normal practice.Zane's father is Harrison Bennett, a local land developer
Edited sentence: Harrison Bennet is Zane's father and is very controlling.He dates a woman called Candy.He drives a Range Rover Sport.It was because of her, the girls' lives were transformed into fishtails.Kim is invasive and got a taste of her own medicine when her cousin Angela frames Kim and makes Cleo believe she planted a pelican from the marine park in the household bathtub.Mermaids often appear in greek mythology.She always finds her sister weird and when she finds Cleo's diary she tries to figure out what's going on.She is considered the local princess and is commonly found hanging out with Zane (though he denys that they were ever together).Sirens are similar to Mermaids.Though she is often the most conscientous and considerate of the girls, at times she can be pedantic and controlling, once even suggesting that she considers chewing a prescribed number of times before swallowing is normal practice.Zane's mother and father split up and his mother is not seen