Original sentence: Other monuments to Dowding can be found in the recreational park in Moffat, Scotland, the town of his birth; in Royal Tunbridge Wells where he died, and there is a bust of him in the War Memorial Cloisters at Winchester College
Edited sentence: Other monuments to Dowding can be found in the recreational park in Moffat, the town of his birth and in Royal Tunbridge Wells where he died.There is a bust of him in the War Memorial Cloisters at Winchester College