Original sentence: Lance Corporal David Jones and another soldier were in an OP near the Glenshane Pass area.The leader of the PIRA unit was Francis Hughes who was from Bellaghy, County Londonderry, who at that time was the "most wanted man" in Northern Ireland when a year earlier on 18 April 1977, Hughes, Dominic McGlinchey and  Ian Milne were travelling in a car near the town of Moneymore when an RUC patrol car carrying four officers signalled them to stop
Edited sentence: Lance Corporal David Jones and another soldier were in an OP near the Glenshane Pass area of Derry.The leader of the PIRA unit was Francis Hughes a Derry born volunteer from Bellaghy, who at that time was the "most wanted man" in Northern Ireland when a year earlier on 18 April 1977, Hughes, Dominic McGlinchey and  Ian Milne were travelling in a car near the town of Moneymore when an RUC patrol car carrying four officers signalled them to stop.Three years later Francis Hughes became the second man to die during the 1981 Irish Hunger Strike on 12 May 1981 on his 59th day on strike after Bobby Sands had died one week earlier, eight more men from the Provisional IRA and Irish National Liberation Army would also die during the hunger strike through out the spring and summer of 1981