Original sentence: The first graduating class in the new campus was comprised of over 40% female students (a dramatic change from the traditional, male-dominated educational system which had until then been the norm in Spain)
Edited sentence: It is a testament to the egalitarian and social-minded government of the Spanish Republic that the first graduating class in the new campus was comprised of over 40% female students (a dramatic change from the traditional, male-dominated educational system which had until then been the norm in Spain)