Original sentence: 29, 2009|date=July 2009}} often list cultural and religious relevance as reasons for perpetuation of cockfighting as a sport.While cockfighting is considered a heinous blood sport by animal welfare and animal rights activists and others, due in some part to the physical trauma the cocks inflict on each other, advocates of the sport
Edited sentence: While cockfighting is considered a heinous blood sport by animal welfare and animal rights activists and others, due in some part to the physical trauma the cocks inflict on each other, advocates of the sport often list cultural and religious relevance as reasons for perpetuation of cockfighting as a sport