Original sentence: Computer security expert and senior technology consultant at Sophos, Graham Cluley, asked in his blog whether the BBC was breaking the Computer Misuse Act - which makes an offense in the UK to access or modify a third-party computer without the owner's consent.. On the other hand internet security comentator Melih Abdulhayoglu went as far as making a video in support of the BBC
Edited sentence: Computer security expert and senior technology consultant at Sophos, Graham Cluley, asked in his blog whether the BBC was breaking the Computer Misuse Act - which makes an offense in the UK to access or modify a third-party computer without the owner's consent.On the other hand internet security comentator Melih Abdulhayoglu went as far as making a video in support of the BBC