Original sentence: In the wake of the September 11 attacks, Bloomberg's administration made a successful bid to host the 2004 Republican National Convention.The convention drew thousands of protesters, among them New Yorkers who despised Bush and the Bush Administration's pursuit of the Iraq war
Edited sentence: In the wake of the September 11 attacks, Bloomberg decided the city should host the 2004 Republican National Convention.The convention drew thousands of protesters, many of them local residents angry over the Iraq war and other issues