Original sentence: In 1963 Desmond Skirrow met with Alida Haskins who showed him the macquette of Cowboy Kate & Other Stories by Sam Haskins.Skirrow was the Creative Director of a major London advertising agency - Masius Wynne-Williams - where his colleagues included the novelist Christopher Wood
Edited sentence: He was the Creative Director of a major London advertising agency, Masius Wynne-Williams, where his colleagues included the novelist Christopher Wood.In 1963 Desmond Skirrow met with Alida Haskins who showed him the macquette of Cowboy Kate and Other Stories by Sam Haskins