Original sentence: Instead, California was able to offer sufficient incentives to enable the manufacturing plant to be built in California.Tesla Motors is seeking government funding for the Model S facility and engineering costs as authorized by Section 136 of the Energy Independence and Security Act of 2007
Edited sentence: Instead, the plant will be built in California, with unaccountable taxpayer-funded incentives by the Californian Government.Tesla Motors is seeking public funding for the Model S facility and engineering costs (with subsequent private enjoyment of the profits) as permitted by Section 136 of the Energy Independence and Security Act of 2007