Original sentence: Navy Chief Petty Officer (NCO, E-7) Kevin Day, stationed on Princeton, recalls that he first noticed the clear radar traces of eight to ten objects around 10 November that he described as travelling southwards in a loose though fixed formation at  in the immediate vicinity of Catalina and San Clemente islands.Objects were faintly detected by an E-2C Hawkeye plane after Princeton sent them coordinates.Prior to the incident, in early November 2004, the  guided missile cruiser , part of Carrier Strike Group 11, had been reportedly tracking mysterious aircraft intermittently for two weeks on an advanced AN/SPY-1B passive scanning phased array radar
Edited sentence: Navy Chief Petty Officer (NCO, E-7) Kevin Day, stationed on Princeton, recalls that he first noticed the clear radar traces of eight to ten objects around 10 November.Prior to the incident, in early November 2004, the  guided missile cruiser , part of Carrier Strike Group 11, had been tracking mysterious aircraft intermittently for two weeks on an advanced AN/SPY-1B passive scanning phased array radar.The objects were also faintly detected by an E-2C Hawkeye plane after Princeton sent them coordinates.They were travelling southwards in a loose though fixed formation at  in the immediate vicinity of Catalina and San Clemente islands