Original sentence: After forming in 1990 while Berman and Pavement frontman Stephen Malkmus were flatmates in New York, the Silver Jews have gone on to release five albums, including the LP American Water in 1997.He released a poetry collection, Actual Air in 1999
Edited sentence: After forming in 1990 while Berman and Pavement frontman Stephen Malkmus were flatmates in New York, the Silver Jews have gone on to release five albums, including the lauded 1997 LP  American Water.He released a poetry collection,  Actual Air  in 1999