Original sentence: Since Pell's elevation to the See of Melbourne, and more particularly since his translation to Sydney, he has taken a high public profile on a wide range of issues, while retaining a strict adherence to his understanding of Catholic orthodoxy
Edited sentence: Since Pell's elevation to the See of Melbourne, and more particularly since his translation to Sydney, he has taken a high public profile on a wide range of issues, while retaining a strict adherence to Catholic orthodoxy