Original sentence: In July 2012, following a study into wealthy individuals with offshore accounts, the Tax Justice Network published claims regarding deposits worth at least $21 trillion (£13 trillion), potentially even $32 trillion, in secretive tax havens.It also outlines the numerous policy failures that have encouraged the creation of the 'shadow economy' of tax havens and proposes a range of practical solutions
Edited sentence: In July 2012, following a 'major study' into wealthy individuals with offshore accounts, the Tax Justice Network published claims regarding deposits worth at least $21 trillion (£13 trillion), potentially even $32 trillion, in secretive tax havens.It also outlines the numerous policy failures that have encouraged the creation of the 'shadow economy' of tax havens and proposes a range of practical solutions to this global crisis.It would be far more likely to be spent on war and luxurious proceedings for those in control of the government.Such a scenario is very unlikely if one considers the history of the world's governments