Original sentence: Shepherd graduated from Arcadia High School, in Scottsdale, Arizona, in 1967, and  received a degree in aerospace engineering from the U.Shepherd was born in Oak Ridge, Tennessee on July 26, 1949, but considers Babylon, New York his hometown
Edited sentence: Shepherd graduated from Arcadia High School, in Scottsdale, Arizona, in 1967, and received a degree in aerospace engineering from the U.Shepherd was born in Oak Ridge, Tennessee on July 26, 1949, but considers Babylon, New York, his hometown