Original sentence: Perhaps as a result, a few 'new' Eagle Owls have been illegally killed, including the female in North Yorkshire who had successfully reared 23 young before she was shot dead in January 2006.The recent apparent increase in successful wild-breeding has attracted opposition from those who believe the owl to be a danger to native species and young livestock
Edited sentence: Perhaps as a result, a few 'new' Eagle Owls have been illegally killed, most tragically the female in North Yorkshire who had successfully reared 23 young before she was shot dead in January 2006.While many people welcome the new Eagle Owls in the UK, the recent apparent increase in successful wild-breeding has sadly attracted opposition from those who believe the Owl to be a danger to native species and young livestock