Original sentence: The College also operates the Thayer Conservatory of Music, a 17-century Thayer family mansion turned Conservatory.The Seventh-day Adventist church has a very large church in the village, as well as the College church, and on Saturday mornings the population of the village grows significantly because everyone from surrounding towns and villages drives in to worship
Edited sentence: The College also operates the Thayer Conservatory of Music, a 17-century Thayer family mansion-turned-conservatory.The Seventh-day Adventist Church has a very large church building in the village, as well as the College church, and on Saturday mornings the population of the village grows significantly because many people from surrounding towns and villages drives in to worship