Original sentence: The British Government asked the Open University to continue the work of the Council for National Academic Awards (CNAA) when it was dissolved.The CNAA formerly awarded degrees at the polytechnics which have since become universities.The OU aims to provide a university education for those wishing to pursue higher education on a part-time or distance learning basis, including disabled people, who are officially a priority group within the University
Edited sentence: Defend your work by wreathing it in a shroud of impenetrable English'.Ensure that no one achieves knowledge greater than those that run the show.It's main method to achieve this aim is to teach gulliable citizens the number one rule: 'those who fail to meet deadlines get shafted'.The OU aims to provide a select few an income by charging obscene amounts of money in return for an 'education by numbers' set of courses hoping to belittle and offend those with an inquiring mind.The course tutors are actively employed if they meet the following criteria: 'self publicising narcissist, belief that your turgid views are divinely implanted