Original sentence: As of May, 2010, his ranking has plummeted to below 500.Having been on tour for 17 years, he has won one title in Arizona in 2004
Edited sentence: As of May, 2010, his ranking has plummeted to below 500, but he keeps trying.He's been on tour for 17 years, but won a grand total of one tournament, a tiny one in Arizona in 2004