Original sentence: , where they spend a fun-filled, perfectly "normal" day together ("Something About The Sunshine").However, this comes to an end when they are tailed by a paparazzi van and are forced to shake it off by going off the main road and eventually into a pile of mud, where Jessica's grandmother's car sinks to the bottom of the mud pool.She smiles and accepts his apology, as well as an invitation to go on a "real" date (with no pretences or disguises)with him.When the paparazzi appear at the dance and film Christopher's apology after the song ends ("What You Mean To Me"), he takes the microphone and tells the paparazzi that he was the one that lied and says he is "crazy" about Jessica and that he will never do that again
Edited sentence: , where they spend a fun-filled, perfectly "normal" day together ("Something About The Sunshine") A.However, this comes to a harsh end when they are tailed by a paparazzi van and are forced to shake it off by going off the main road and eventually into a pile of mud, where Jessica's grandmother's car sinks to the bottom of the mud pool.She smiles and accepts his apology, as well as an invitation to go on a "real" date (with no pretenses or disguises)with him.When the paparazzi appear at the dance and film Christopher's apology after the song ends ("What You Mean To Me"), he takes the mic and tells the paparazzi that he was the one that lied and says he is "crazy" about Jessica and that he will never do that again