Original sentence: Among their complaints were her use of the title of Doctor despite the doctorate being only honorary.Bronx Science counts six Nobel Prize winners among its graduates, more than any other secondary school in the world:.It should be noted that Ms.Numerous copies of the essay were distributed, although many of them were eventually confiscated by the school's deans.Other grievances cited include Reidy claiming "to be an expert on science education...", "...systematically [subverting] the School Based Option (SBO) teacher hiring process by secondguessing the SBO hiring committees-made up of parents, union leaders and teachers", and "...making the xenophobic comment that many of our Asian students 'speak Asian.Reidy's use of the title of Doctor has become one point of contention between faculty members and herself.Robert Drake (who is known for his contempt for the administration) and Dr.The letters, which referred to Reidy as a "quack", caused a stir among the faculty and student body
Edited sentence: Among their grievances were her use of the title of Doctor despite receiving only an honorary doctorate from her undergraduate school.Bronx Science counts six Nobel Prize winners among its graduates, the most of any secondary school in the world:.It should be noted, however, that her use of the title of Doctor has become one point of contention between faculty members and herself.Other greivances cited include Reidy claiming "to be an expert on science education...", "...systematically [subverting] the School Based Option (SBO) teacher hiring process by secondguessing the SBO hiring committees-made up of parents, union leaders and teachers", and "...making the xenophobic comment that many of our Asian students 'speak Asian.Robert Drake(who constantly tells his students in class about how he hates the administration)  and Dr.The letters, which referred to Reidy as a "quack", caused a stir among the faculty and student body with numerous copies of it being made although many of them were eventually confiscated by the school's deans