Original sentence: At the same time, he and Smith presented a landmark paper on the technique at the International Computer Music Conference, which was then published back-to-back with the Karplus/Strong paper in Computer Music Journal.The result, Silicon Valley Breakdown, was premiered at the Vennice Biennale in 1983 and has been performed in over twenty-five countries
Edited sentence: At the same time, he and Smith presented a seminal paper on the technique at the International Computer Music Conference, which was then published back-to-back with the Karplus/Strong paper in Computer Music Journal.Jaffe and Schloss describe their approach in a number of articles, including The Computer-Extended Ensemble, published in Computer Music Journal in 1994.The result, Silicon Valley Breakdown, was premiered at the Vennice Biennale in 1983 and has been performed in over twenty-five countries and regarded as a landmark work in the field