Original sentence: A male rival of Sunabōzu, and an equal match for him in combat.He is renowned as a fearsome debt collector who not only collects the money, but even the soul of his victim.Junko is an object of Kenta's desires, a fact that she continuously takes advantage of in order to manipulate him.Natsuko was a childhood friend of Kenta and a crybaby (according to him).She first met Sunabōzu when she was chased by Mokoto Kawazu.She has not been in contact with Kenta and her brothers after leaving to work for the Oasis Government, where she has risen to the rank of captain.She is a proficient hand-to-hand combatant and the current idol of Kosuna.She is known as the Vixen of the Desert.Sister of the Machine Gun Brothers.While he has earned his reputation through forceful tactics, he is not against running away when the situation turns to his disadvantage
Edited sentence: A male rival equal to Sunabōzu, he can easily give Sunabōzu a run for his money.In any case, his piercing eyes and towering bravado, along with his forceful tactics gives him the reputation he deserves.Renowned as a fearsome debt collector, he will not only take your money, but your soul as well (or your pants along with your underwear).She first met Sunabōzu when she was chased by Mokoto Kawazu, and, succumbing to his weakness with women, he decided to win over Junko by fulfilling her needs... in more ways than one.She has not been in contact with Sunabōzu for quite a while as she had gone to work for the Oasis Government (Apparently, she was rather flat-chested in her younger days as evidenced from Sunabōzu's shock over the size of her chest when she returned to visit).She holds a captain rank in the Oasis Government, and can fight very well.She is the current idol of Kosuna.She uses her ample breasts to manipulate him and is known as the "Vixen of the Desert".Sister of the Machine Gun Brothers, she was also a childhood friend of Sunabōzu and was a crybaby (according to Sunabōzu)