Original sentence: Beginning in fall 2009, Mason will attend University of California,Los Angeles.Mason attended and graduated from Ransom Everglades School and beginning in the fall of 2009, Mason will attend University of California,Los Angeles, studying journalism
Edited sentence: Beginning in fall 2009, Mason will attend University of California, Los Angeles.Mason attended and graduated from Ransom Everglades School and beginning in the fall of 2009, Mason will attend University of California, Los Angeles, studying journalism