Original sentence: In 2001, a group of pupils produced a glossy calendar as part of a Young Enterprise business project, sold for charity, called "Sexey's Hot Twelve" commissioned by Paul Francis who is the current deputy head, that featured 12 pictures of boys and girls in seductive poses
Edited sentence: In 2001, a group of pupils produced a glossy calendar as part of a Young Enterprise business project, sold for charity, called "Sexey's Hot Twelve",that featured 12 pictures of boys and girls in seductive poses