Original sentence: Out of 1,197,000 total enlisted men, about - 1 to 2 %  are said to have experienced a sexual assault; Out of 203,000 total enlisted women – about 25% of military women are said to have experienced a sexual assault
Edited sentence: Coupled with an overwhelmingly male hierarchy and personnel, the armed forces, like religious institutions, reinforces a homocentric environment consistently unreceptive to female entrants.Due to generations of bitter opposition to women’s participation in the military its culture has developed deep roots of hostility and harassment toward female enlistees.Out of 1,197,000 total enlisted men, about - 1 to 2 % are said to have experienced a sexual assault; Out of 203,000 total enlisted women – about 25% of military women are said to have experienced a sexual assault