Original sentence: Before entering politics, Bush was a businessman involved primarily in the oil industry but also in professional sports.Bush has called for major changes in Social Security, identifying the issue as a priority for his second term.Bush was re-elected in 2004, defeating Senator John Kerry of Massachusetts.He was a "C" student, scoring 77 percent (with no As and one D, in astronomy) with a grade point average of 2.35 out of 4.00.He won the nomination of the Republican Party in the 2000 presidential election against Senator John McCain and others.In 1994, he was elected as Texas governor, and was re-elected to that position in 1998
Edited sentence: Before entering politics, Bush was a businessman involved primarily in the oil industry.Bush has called for saving Social Security, identifying the issue as a priority for his second term.Bush was reelected in 2004, defeating Senator John Kerry of Massachusetts.He was a "C" student, scoring 77 percent (with no As and one D, in astronomy) woth a grade point average of 2.35 out of 4.00.He won the nomination of the Republican Party in the 2000 presidential election aganist Senator John McCain.In 1994, he was elected as Texas governor, and was reelected to that position in 1998