Original sentence: After a couple of false starts at forming their own band, the duo recruited drummer Aaron Burckhard, creating the first incarnation of what would eventually become Nirvana.Nirvana was an American rock band originating from Aberdeen, Washington
Edited sentence: After a couple of false starts at forming their own band, the duo recruited drummer Aaron Burckhard, and created the first incarnation of what would eventually become Nirvana.Nirvana was an American Grunge band originating from Aberdeen, Washington