Original sentence: As noted above, word of the sinking reached a young Herman Melville, who was inspired by the idea that a whale was capable of such violence
Edited sentence: As noted above, word of the sinking reached a young Herman Melville when, while serving on the whaler Acushnet he met the son of Owen Chase who was serving on another whaler.Chase lent his father's account of the ordeal to Melville, who read it at sea and was inspired by the idea that a whale was capable of such violence