Original sentence: His meetings with foreign diplomats and leaders have served to make the sometimes controversial religion more globally respected.With his 60 years of public relations experience, President Hinckley has undoubtedly been a significant influence in the growth of the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints throughout the world
Edited sentence: His meetings with foreign diplomats and leaders have served to make the controversial cult a more respected international religion.With his 60 years of public relations experience, President Hinckley has undoubtedly been a significant influence in the growth of Mormonism throughout the world