Original sentence: Ray strikes up a romance with Chloë, a local drug dealer moonlighting as a production assistant, taking her to a fancy restaurant, where he gets into an argument with a couple and ends up knocking them unconscious
Edited sentence: Ray strikes up a romance with Chloë, a local drug dealer moonlighting as a production assistant, taking her to a fancy restaurant, where he gets involved in a fistfight with an abrasive couple