Original sentence: The University first informed students via e-mail at 9:26 AM, over two hours after the first shooting, warning them of the danger and canceling classes.Virginia Governor Tim Kaine returned early from a trip to Tokyo, Japan, and declared a "state of emergency" in Virginia, allowing the governor to immediately deploy state personnel, equipment, and other resources to help out in the aftermath of a shootings
Edited sentence: The University first informed students via e-mail at 9:26 AM, over two hours after the first shooting, warning them of the danger, however, students remained clueless about the extent of the attacks and were unaware that classes would be canceled until 10:30 AM.Virginia Governor Tim Kaine returned early from a trip to Tokyo, Japan, and declared a "state of emergency" in Virginia, allowing the governor to immediately deploy state personnel, equipment, and other resources to help out in the aftermath of the shootings