Original sentence: In November 2014, Harlow spoke in a TED presentation, recalling her experience with living with Vitiligo.She talked about the condition and answered questions about her life living with Vitiligo.She was diagnosed with the chronic skin condition Vitiligo, characterized by depigmentation of portions of the skin, at the age of four.The error by the marshalls, having instructed her to wave the flag, did not seriously impact the race result (although 13th- and 14th-placed drivers were switched), but it resulted in extra risks of injury taken by drivers and marshals around the track, as the race leader Sebastian Vettel as well as other drivers maintained racing speed after the chequered flag was shown, during what was considered by the track marshals and other personnel to be the slow-down lap when they traditionally emerge on track from behind safety barriers.Winnie Harlow (born Chantelle Brown-Young; July 27, 1994) is a Canadian fashion model and public spokesperson on the skin condition Vitiligo.television series America's Next Top Model while having a prominent form of Vitiligo
Edited sentence: Her massive error did not seriously impact the race result (although 13th- and 14th-placed drivers were switched), but it resulted in extra risks of injury taken by drivers and marshals around the track, as the race leader Sebastian Vettel as well as other drivers maintained racing speed after the chequered flag was shown, during what was considered by the track marshals and other personnel to be the slow-down lap when they traditionally emerge on track from behind safety barriers.However she committed a major error by waving the flag early (at the end of lap 69 instead of lap 70), before all racing laps had been completed.In November 2014, Harlow spoke in a TED presentation, recalling her experience with living with vitiligo.She talked about the condition and answered questions about her life living with vitiligo.She was diagnosed with the chronic skin condition vitiligo, characterized by depigmentation of portions of the skin, at the age of four.Winnie Harlow (born Chantelle Brown-Young; July 27, 1994) is a Canadian fashion model and public spokesperson on the skin condition vitiligo.television series America's Next Top Model while having a prominent form of vitiligo