Original sentence: Some churches are even closing, merging with other parishes.The allophone population of Montreal (those who speak neither English nor French) in particular represents many different religions and faiths.Traditional religious views are usually portrayed in a negative light by the urban media, as shown in the 2000s in the debate on religious freedom versus gay rights surrounding the issue of same-sex marriage, for example
Edited sentence: Some churches are even closing, merging with another parish.The allophone population of Montreal in particular represents many different religions and faiths.Traditional religious views are usually portrayed in a negative light by the urban media, as shown notably in the 2000s in the debate on religious freedom versus gay rights surrounding the issue of same-sex marriage, for example