Original sentence: (His thesis  was on the political power-diffusion effects of successful and failed counter-insurgency operations in Indonesia.) He has served in several counterinsurgency and guerrilla warfare campaigns in Southeast Asia and the Middle East, as well as in peacekeeping and peace enforcement operations.Currently based at the US State Department, Colonel Kilcullen, 39, has a doctorate in anthropolgy about the politics of insurgency.McMaster and others, were put in charge of the campaign in 2007.While based at the U
Edited sentence: Currently based at the US State Department, Colonel Kilcullen, 39, has a doctorate in the politics of insurgency, and wrote his thesis on the political power-diffusion effects of successful and failed counter-insurgency operations in Indonesia.He has served in several counterinsurgency and guerrilla warfare campaigns in Southeast Asia and the Middle East, as well as in peacekeeping and peace enforcement operations.McMaster and others, have (as of early 2007) been appointed to command positions in Iraq, as part of what many observers consider a late recognition by the Bush administration that its earlier policies in Iraq have failed.These war critics, who include some of the world's foremost counterinsurgency experts, including Kilcullen, have been given the opportunity for a last-ditch effort to salvage the campaign.Whilst based at the U