Original sentence: Sun Devil Marching Band recognizes members with excellent servie records.The awards of note: three year members get a Sun Devil Marching Band lined windbreaker and four year members get a Sun Devil Marching Band watch
Edited sentence: Sun Devil Marching Band recognizes members with excellent service records.The awards of note for service records are that three year members get a Sun Devil Marching Band lined windbreaker and four year members get a Sun Devil Marching Band watch