Original sentence: One of his sons, Edward Pellew Halsted, reached the rank of rear-admiral, while his youngest son, Lawrence G Halsted, died at Bombay on 7 November 1847 while aboard his ship, the steam sloop.Sir Lawrence Halsted died at Stoke, Devon in April 1841.Sir Lawrence William Halsted GCB (2 April 1764 – April 1841) was an officer of the Royal Navy who served during the American War of Independence and the French Revolutionary and Napoleonic Wars
Edited sentence: One of his sons, Edward Pellew Halsted, reached the rank of vice-admiral, while his youngest son, Lawrence G Halsted, died at Bombay on 7 November 1847 while aboard his ship, the steam sloop.Sir Lawrence Halsted died at Stoke, Devon in 22 April 1841.Sir Lawrence William Halsted GCB (2 April 1764 – 22 April 1841) was an officer of the Royal Navy who served during the American War of Independence and the French Revolutionary and Napoleonic Wars