Original sentence: Aki and Dr.He tells the operators of New York's barrier to lower the shields in a section of the city.Sid devise a plan to locate the 8th spirit by lowering Aki and Gray into the crater inside a bio-etheric shield vehicle.The pair locate the 8th spirit, a phantom, when an energy beam from the Zeus station crashes into the crater, seemingly killing the Phantoms on the surface, including the 8th spirit.When Aki wakes up, she calls Gray in to use his OVO pack battery to project the completed wave pattern of the eight spirits
Edited sentence: After locating the 8th spirit, Aki and Dr.He has his men arrest the operators of New York's barrier control room, and has his men lower the shields in a section of the city.Sid devise a plan to capture the 8th spirit by lowering Aki and Gray into the crater inside a bio-etheric shield vehicle.The pair is about to capture the 8th spirit, a phantom, when an energy beam from the Zeus station crashes into the crater, seemingly killing the Phantoms on the surface, including the 8th spirit.When Aki wakes up, she calls Gray in to use his OVO battery pack to project the completed wave pattern of the eight spirits