Original sentence: Also scattered thoughout the pages are the numerous pictures of the human anatomy and also documenting such things as girlfriends and band landmarks, to the rarer, such as Manson with Anton Szandor LaVey
Edited sentence: More exciting, perhaps, are the numerous pictures scattered throughout the pages, of the human anatomy and also documenting such things as girlfriends and band landmarks, to the rarer, such as Manson with Anton Szandor LaVey