Original sentence: CreekConnect is a web site that allows students to view grades, schedules, calendars, and announcements that are added by their teachers, who are able to manipulate student grades, as well as exchange messages with their students
Edited sentence: CreekConnect is a web site that, when working, allows students to view grades, schedules, calendars, and announcements that are added by their teachers, who are able to manipulate student grades, as well as exchange messages with their students.Locally, students who participate in the program tend to hold more respected positions in such activities as Student Government, Academic Team, Prom court, sports, etc