Original sentence: Born in Amdo province of Tibet during 1357, Tsongkhapa received full lay ordination at the age of three from the 4th Karmapa Rolpey Dorje (Rol-pa'i Rdo-rje) and entitled Kunga Nyingpo (Kun-dga' Snying-po).Tsongkhapa (Wylie transliteration: Btsong-kha-pa) (1357 - 1419) , whose name means "The Man from Onion Valley", also known as "Je Rinpoche (Rje Rin-bo-che)" and by his ordained name Lobsang Drakpa (Blo-bzang Grags-pa), is recorded as the founder of the Geluk (Dge-lugs) school of Tibetan Buddhism.Tsongkhapa would go on to found the Geluk (Dge-lugs-pa) order, built on the foundations of the Kadampa (Bka'-gdams-pa) tradition, with an emphasis on the Vinaya and scholarly pursuits
Edited sentence: Born in Amdo province of Tibet during 1357, Je Tsongkhapa received full lay ordination at the age of three from the 4th Karmapa Rolpey Dorje (Rol-pa'i Rdo-rje) and entitled Kunga Nyingpo (Kun-dga' Snying-po).Je Tsongkhapa (Wylie transliteration: Btsong-kha-pa) (1357 - 1419) , whose name means "The Man from Onion Valley", also known as "Je Rinpoche (Rje Rin-bo-che)" and by his ordained name Lobsang Drakpa (Blo-bzang Grags-pa), is recorded as the founder of the Geluk (Dge-lugs) school of Tibetan Buddhism.Je Tsongkhapa would go on to found the Geluk (Dge-lugs-pa) order, built on the foundations of the Kadampa (Bka'-gdams-pa) tradition, with an emphasis on the Vinaya and scholarly pursuits