Original sentence: As of 2015, governments in sub-Saharan Africa spend on average 18% of their total budget on education, against 15% in the rest of the world.At the World Conference held in Jomtien, Thailand in 1990, delegates from 155 countries and representatives of some 150 organizations gathered with the goal to promote universal primary education and the radical reduction of illiteracy before the end of the decade.In Rwanda, the first year of secondary school was attached to primary education in 2009, which significantly increased the number of pupils enrolled at this level of education.In the years immediately after the Dakar Forum, the efforts made by African States towards achieving EFA produced multiple results in sub-Saharan Africa.Since the World Education Forum in Dakar, considerable efforts have been made to respond to these demographic challenges in terms of education.The World Education Forum, held ten years later in Dakar, Senegal, provided the opportunity to reiterate and reinforce these goals.This initiative contributed to having education made a priority of the Millennium Development Goals in 2000, with the aim of achieving universal schooling (MDG2) and eliminating gender disparities, especially in primary and secondary education (MDG3)
Edited sentence: At the World Conference held in Jomtien (Thailand) in 1990, delegates from 155 countries and representatives of some 150 organizations committed to promoting universal primary education and radically reducing illiteracy before the end of the decade.In Rwanda, for example, the first year of secondary school was attached to primary education in 2009, which significantly increased the number of pupils enrolled at this level of education.In the years immediately after the Dakar Forum, the efforts made by States towards achieving EFA produced spectacular results in sub-Saharan Africa.Since the World Education Forum in Dakar (2000), considerable efforts have been made to respond to these new demographic challenges in terms of education.That initiative contributed to having education placed at the heart of the Millennium Development Goals in 2000 with their aim of achieving universal schooling (MDG2) and eliminating gender disparities, especially in primary and secondary education (MDG3).The World Education Forum, held ten years later in Dakar (Senegal), provided the opportunity to reiterate and reinforce this commitment for universal primary education.Today, governments in sub-Saharan Africa spend on average 18% of their total budget on education, against 15% in the rest of the world