Original sentence: Acharya S is the pen name of Dorothy Melne Murdock, an American critic of Christianity who operates a web site, "Truth be Known".As academic qualification she holds a Master of Liberal Arts degree from Franklin University.Both of these have themselves been criticised, as of suspect authority.Her book, The Christ Conspiracy: The Greatest Story Ever Sold is an expanded version of her web site.It is based in secondary sources, including Barbara Walker's "Women's Encyclopedia of Myth and Secrets" and "The World's 16 Crucified Saviors" by Kersey Graves.On it she contends to reveal that Jesus Christ is a fictional person, and a plagiarised pagan myth stolen by the Early Church, and supposed as an actual person so as to unify the Roman State.She bills herself as a historian, mythologist, religious scholar, and linguist, as well as an archeologist.The latter is the main source of her book
Edited sentence: Acharya S is the pen name of Dorothy Melne Murdock.Her book, "The Christ Conspiracy: The Greatest Story Ever Sold" is an expanded verison of her web site, and both have been heavily criticised for lack of use of primary sources, obtuse or biased remarks, lack of formal reasoning, and prominent use of secondary sources, which themselves are often suspect.However, she seems to hold only a Master of Liberal Arts degree from Franklin University.She claims many impressive things about herself, billing herself as a historian, mythologist, religious scholar, and linguist, as well as an archeologist.She is an American critic of Christianity who operates a web site, "Truth be Known" in which she contends to reveal that Jesus Christ is a fictional person and a plagiarised pagan myth stolen by the early church and supposed as an actual person so as to unify the Roman State.The latter is the primary source of her book and relies heavily on quotations from others to generate an air of authority for the work, which asserts that Jesus did not exist as an actual person because the author has found people who say he didn't.These include Barbara Walker's "Women's Encyclopedia of Myth and Secrets" and "The World's 16 Crucified Saviors" by Kersye Graves