Original sentence: However, two French traders, Pierre-Esprit Radisson and Médard des Groseilliers feeling themselves to have been victimized by the French aristocracy, approached a group of businessmen in Boston, Massachusetts to help finance their explorations
Edited sentence: However, two French traders, Pierre-Esprit Radisson and Médard des Groseilliers had been victimized by the French aristocracy, and they approached a group of businessmen in Boston, Massachusetts to help finance their explorations