Original sentence: He was the first lawyer in the Dutch colony and an activist for democratic reform in the city of New Amsterdam, or modern New York City.Van der Donck repeatedly presented his case to the States General opposite a representative sent by Stuyvesant.While ostensibly putting himmself at Kieft's disposal as lawyer and translator, he was working with disgruntled members of the community to get Kieft recalled and convince the company of the need for a representative government in New Amsterdam
Edited sentence: He was the first lawyer in the Dutch colony and a dedicated activist for democratic reform in the city of New Amsterdam, or modern New York City.Van der Donck repeatedly presented his case to the States General while they delayed taking any action.While ostensibly putting himmself at Kieft's disposal as lawyer and translator, he was working with disgruntled members of the community to get Kieft recalled and convince the company of the need for a representative government in New Amsterdam in order to avoid another tyranny of the inept