Original sentence: Set in the 1400s, The Wool-Pack tells the story of how a boy, Nicholas Fetterlock, and his betrothed-to-be save the wool trade from much damage.The novel was written for children aged 8 years and above.They stop a villain and Nicholas's father’s secretary from defying the strict rules of the guild
Edited sentence: Even with a little romance thrown in to charm the females; it still does not drive away male readers.It was written for children aged 8 and up - is a great addition to children’s literature.Set in the 1400s The Wool Pack tells the story of how a boy and his betrothed-to-be save the wool trade from much damage.The excitement of this adventure will capture readers interest and drive away all other thoughts (though your mother or father may not enjoy that quality of it as much as you).The lively young hero - Nicholas Fetterlock – will entrance readers from the start.The story tells of how they stop a villain and Nicholas's father’s secretary, from defying the strict rules of the guild.The strong plot attracts readers of all ages – including adults.This book is perfect for male and female readers alike, and would be my first choice as a book to sit down with on a rainy day