Original sentence: The history of Malaysia is a relatively recent offshoot of the history of the wider Malay-Indonesian world that today comprises six states - Malaysia, Indonesia, the Philippines, Singapore, Brunei and East Timor – largely as the result of outside influences
Edited sentence: The area today comprises of six states — Malaysia, Indonesia, the Philippines, Singapore, Brunei and East Timor — largely as the result of outside influences.The history of Malaysia is a relatively recent offshoot of the history of the Malay Archipelago