Original sentence: He created a program where the vessel became a unique platform for research and learning.Occidental College converted the Vantuna from a fishing boat to a marine research vessel with the help of an NSF grant.Undergraduate students could study marine biology in hands-on way.[need the grant number] The conversion included the addition of a large A-frame on the stern, a hydrographic winch, a large main winch, and associated hydraulic system
Edited sentence: He created a program where the vessel became a unique platform for research and learning, allowing undergraduate students the opportunity for "hands-on" study of marine biology.Occidental College converted the Vantuna from a fishing boat to a marine research vessel with the help of a National Science Foundation grant.[need the grant number] The conversion included the addition of a large A-frame on the stern, hydrographic and large main winches, and the associated hydraulic system