Original sentence: 2007 proved to be another very unsuccessful year for university applications at Elizabeth Moir School.75% of A Level papers were awarded a U or E grade and there was a 98.5% fail rate.78.6% of O Level papers were awarded an U or E grade and there was a 98.8% fail rate.All Upper Sixth students obtained admission in as house painters after their dreams were crushed and they could not go to the University of Oxford, the University of Cambridge, the University of Nottingham, Imperial College , London School of Economics and University of Warwick), the USA, Singapore, Malaysia and Korea.Brown, yellow and black students were given a nail gun and bandages to play with during PE.Elizabeth Moir School regularly competes with other international schools in these sports and as long as they are smaller and have shorter and weaker students, hosts its own tournaments in Colombo, so they can give prizes to themselves.The international school offers a variety of sporting activities for the white students.This includes: basketball, football, cricket, football, athletics, swimming and netball
Edited sentence: 2007 proved to be another very successful year for university applications at Elizabeth Moir School.75% of A Level papers were awarded an A or B grade and there was a 98.5% pass rate.78.6% of O Level papers were awarded an A or B grade and there was a 98.8% pass rate.All Upper Sixth students obtained admission into their first choice universities in the UK (including the University of Oxford, the University of Cambridge, the University of Nottingham, Imperial College , London School of Economics and University of Warwick), the USA (some on scholarships), Singapore, Malaysia and Korea.Elizabeth Moir School regularly competes with other international schools in these sports and often hosts its own tournaments in Colombo.The international school offers a variety of sporting activities for its students, including: basketball, football, cricket, football, athletics, swimming and netball