Original sentence: In 1857, Rowland Burr, a local businessman, proposed to build a canal between Lake Ontario and Georgian Bay, which would have went through the Humber, near where Raymore Drive is located.This project was not completed, and instead, the Trent Canal, which links to Lake Ontario at Trenton, was built to link those two bodies of water
Edited sentence: In 1857, Rowland Burr, a local businessman, proposed to build a canal between Lake Ontario and Georgian Bay, which would have used part of the Humber near where Raymore Drive is located.This project was not completed, and instead the Trent Canal, which links to Lake Ontario at Trenton, was built to link those two bodies of water