Original sentence: As Lieutenant Governor, Gray Davis focused on efforts on the California economy and worked to encourage new industries to locate and expand in the state.As the state's second-highest officeholder, he served as President of the State Senate, Chair of the Commission for Economic Development, Chair of the State Lands Commission, Regent of the University of California and Trustee of the California State University.He also worked to keep college education affordable for California's middle-class families and oversaw the largest student-fee reduction in California history
Edited sentence: As Lieutenant Governor, Gray Davis focused on efforts to keep jobs in California and encourage new and fast-growing industries to locate and expand in the state.As the state's second-highest officeholder, he also served as President of the State Senate, Chair of the Commission for Economic Development, Chair of the State Lands Commission, Regent of the University of California and Trustee of the California State University.He also fought to keep college education affordable for California's middle-class families, pushing through the largest student-fee reduction in California history