Original sentence: "  The album was recorded in an eleven-day-long session with Carlile , the twins (Tim and Phil Hanseroth) and drummer Matt Chamberlain to capture the raw intensity of Carlile's live performances.The crack in Carlile's vocals during the title track, "The Story", came out by accident and was a direct result of the way the album was recorded
Edited sentence: "  The album was recorded in one, eleven-day-long session with Carlile herself, The Twins (Tim and Phil Hanseroth) and drummer Matt Chamberlain to capture the raw intensity of Carlile's live performances.The now-famous crack in Carlile's vocals during the title track, "The Story", came out by accident and was a direct result - and gift - of the album being recorded in one session