Original sentence: It also pointed out that many of the puppy mill bred dogs suffer long-term health problems.Many of these dogs are sold on the internet or by pet retailers to buyers who are unaware of the dogs’ background.On May 29, 2008, MSNBC aired a report about puppy mills, in which Oprah Winfrey revealed an industry fraught with problems and apparent cruelty.The broadcast showed puppy mills with small cages, with chicken wire floors, stacked in rows from floor to ceiling, and stated that many dogs spend their entire lives within these tiny cages.The report claimed that customers who object to this treatment of puppies unknowingly allow the industry to thrive
Edited sentence: Additionally, many of these dogs suffer long-term health problems.It was described that many of these dogs are either sold on the internet to unsuspecting buyers, or shipped to pet retailers who likewise, sell them to unsuspecting buyers.On May 29, 2008, MSNBC aired a report of the cruel side of puppy mills, in which Oprah Winfrey revealed the dark side of the industry.The broadcast showed puppy mills with small cages stacked in rows from floor to ceiling, and mentioned that many dogs spend their lives in these tiny cages with floors made of chicken wire, 24 hours a day, 7 days a week.These customers, many of who would have personal objections to this treatment, are unknowingly responsible for allowing the industry to thrive