Original sentence: As Dave and Eli sproing and boing through Eli’s busy day, Eli is finally in the right places at the right time.But since Eli can’t be trusted to stick to Dave’s colour coded schedule, Eli finds himself tied to Dave 24/7…by bungee cords.But when Warren tells Caitlin that the action figure Eli traded to her is a knock off, Eli must make the toughest choice a fanboy can make:  The girl or the game.Dressed Alll in black.Eli totally freaks.She’s tough.Wearing lycra, guyliner and a wig is not exactly what Eli had in mind for his shot at Rock’n’Roll fame
Edited sentence: As Dave and Eli spong and bong through Eli’s busy day, Eli is finally in the right places at the right time.But since Eli can’t be trusted to stick to Dave’s color coded schedule, Eli finds himself tied to Dave 24/7…by bungee cords.But when Warren tells Caitlin that the action figure Eli traded to her is a knock off, Eli must make the toughest choice a fan-boy can make:  The girl or the game.Meanwhile, Eli totally freaks.She’s tough, ruthless, and dressed all in black.Wearing Lycra, guyliner and a wig is not exactly what Eli had in mind for his shot at Rock’n’Roll fame