Original sentence: Most historians agree that his initial intentions were genuine, but his abandonment of the community is viewed as a turning point for the worse for the Tasmanian Aboriginals
Edited sentence: Moreover, his empty promises of providing a place where Aborigines could practice their cultural traditions and ceremonies never came to fruition.Some historians agree that his initial intentions were genuine, but his abandonment of the community is viewed as a turning point for the worse for the Tasmanian Aboriginals