Original sentence: By the Concordat Hitler managed to force an integration of an internationally autonomous and all-embracing church into his purely pan-Germanic religious requirements and with it, the Nazi Government of Germany gained its first international acceptance--the Reichskonkordat was one of its first international treaties.In the Concordat, the German government achieved controls over the normal autonomy of the church by requiring  an oath of Allegiance and its priests to be Germans and subject to German superiors.On behalf of Cardinal Pacelli, Monsignor Ludwig Kaas, the out-going chairman of the Centre Party,  negotiated the draft of the terms with Papen.Restriction was also placed on the Catholic organisations.The Church's independance was further crucially weakened by complete proscription of all clerical  interference in the political field (articles 16 and 32).The Nazi government succeeded  in silencing all their Catholic critics and in allaying popular distrust in its anti-church NSDAP manifesto.The negotiation  effected the dissolvement of the long-standing and constitutionally inclined  Centre Party
Edited sentence: In the Concordat, the German government achieved controls over the traditional autonomy of the church by requiring an oath of Allegiance and its priests to be Germans and subject to German superiors.On behalf of Cardinal Pacelli, Monsignor Ludwig Kaas, the out-going chairman of the Centre Party, negotiated the draft of the terms with Papen.Restrictions were also placed on the Catholic organisations.The Church's independance was further crucially weakened by complete proscription of all clerical interference in the political field (articles 16 and 32).The Nazi government succeeded in silencing all their Catholic critics and in allaying popular distrust in its anti-church NSDAP manifesto.The negotiation effected the dissolution of the long-standing and constitutionally inclined  Centre Party