Original sentence: The flow of water washed away the embankment of the railway further down the hill.This caused the first train in the morning, a mail and goods train to crash into the breach, killing one and injuring two engine crew
Edited sentence: The flow of hundreds of tons of water washed away the embankment of the railway further down the hill, tearing a 40 yd crater 50 ft deep.This caused the first traffic of the morning, a mail and goods train composed of 16 carriages and two vans, to crash into the breach, killing one and injuring two engine crew