Original sentence: A community swimming pool operates in the summer months within the recreation precinct where there is also the lawn bowling club, netball and tennis courts, skateboarding site, along with the newly regenerated football oval beside which is the community hall and children's playground which local groups use for a variety of functions.A housing development, nearing completion in 2007, is for over-55s in a secure environment.A newsagency and a post office operating six days a week, a bakery outlet, a milkbar and take-away shop, a combined-churches charity shop, an Equestrian outfitters, a pet shop, a gift shop, a Ned Kelly memorabilia  shop, an automotive garage, a chemist, butcher, and a full-time ANZ Bank branch operating out of the newsagency, a unisex hairdresser, plus the "Iona Hotel" (now known as the "Garfield Hotel" make up the occupants on the main street which runs parallel with the railway that dissects the town with the station at its centre.Garfield has an undulating golf course on Thirteen Mile Road run by the Garfield Golf Club
Edited sentence: A modern community swimming pool operates in the summer months within the recreation precinct where there is also the lawn bowling club, netball and tennis courts, skateboarding site, along with the newly regenerated football oval beside which is the community hall and children's playground which local groups utilise for a variety of functions.A new housing development currently nearing completion this year (2007), is for over-55s in a secure environment.A newsagency and a post office operating six days a week, a bakery outlet, a milkbar and take-away shop, a combined-churches charity shop, an Equestrian outfitters, a pet shop, a gift shop, a Ned Kelly memoribilia  shop, an automotive garage, a chemist, butcher, and a full-time ANZ Bank branch operating out of the newsagency, a unisex hairdresser, plus the "Iona Hotel" (now known as the "Garfield Hotel" make up the occupants on the main street which runs parallel with the railway that dissects the town with the station at its centre.Garfield has an attractive undulating golf course  on Thirteen Mile Road run by the Garfield Golf Club