Original sentence: Hawthorn had the better of the first quarter, leading by nineteen points at quarter time, before the Kangaroos hit their stride in the second quarter, kicking five goals to two to lead by four points at half time.Leigh Matthews and Michael Moncrieff each kicked 4 goals for the Hawks, while Phil Baker kicked 6 for the Kangaroos
Edited sentence: Hawthorn had the better of the first quarter, with Hawks forward Michael Moncrieff kicking two goals in the first two minutes of the game, and they led by nineteen points at quarter time.However, the Kangaroos hit their stride in the second quarter, kicking five goals to two to lead by four points at half time.Moncrieff and Leigh Matthews each kicked 4 goals for the Hawks, while Phil Baker kicked 6 for the Kangaroos