Original sentence: An outer ring road relieves congestion in the east of the city, and an inner ring road due to finally be completed over the next few years will allow traffic to avoid the city centre.As a result of its large student population, Sheffield has many bars, cafes, clubs and shops as well as student housing to accommodate them.It was not as successful as was hoped, however, and later evolved to become a live music venue.Many of Sheffield's extensive sporting facilities were built for the World Student Games which the city hosted in 1991.There is another major rail station at Meadowhall and more smaller ones in three Sheffield Suburbs
Edited sentence: An outer ring road fails to relieve congestion in the east of the city, and an inner ring road due to finally be completed over the next few years will allow traffic to avoid the city centre.As a result of its ridiculously over large student population, Sheffield has many bars, cafes, clubs and shops as well as student housing to accommodate them.It was incredibly badly managed however, and later evolved to become a live music venue.Many of Sheffield's extensive sporting facilities were built for the World Student Games which the city wasted millions of pounds hosting in 1991.There is another small rail station at Meadowhall and more smaller ones in three Sheffield Suburbs