Original sentence: As reported by Kushel with The New England Journal of Medicine, in 2017 alone 649 people in California were infected with hepatitis A; this outbreak began in the homeless population.Of those accounted for, 192,875 of them were unsheltered and "lived in a place not meant for human habitation, such as the street or an abandoned building".Robinson and Sickels with the University of Colorado Denver released a report highlighting the criminalization of homelessness across the State of Colorado.This, in turn, leads to public health concerns such as the hepatitis A outbreak seen in California
Edited sentence: As reported by Dr Kushel with The New England Journal of Medicine, in 2017 alone 649 people in California were infected with hepatitis-A; this outbreak began in the homeless population.If we fail to consider the true cost of denying homeless people bathroom access, we put our communities at risk and leave an entire group of people to live as second-class citizens without basic first-world amenities.Of those accounted for, 192,875 of them were unsheltered and “lived in a place not meant for human habitation, such as the street or an abandoned building”.Robinson and Sickels with the University of Colorado Denver  released a report highlighting the criminalization of homelessness across the State of Colorado.This, in turn, leads to public health concerns such as the hepatitis-A outbreak seen in California