Original sentence: He joined the team on January 24, 2004 after a collegiate coaching career that included many schools, most notably the University of Massachusetts, where he posted a record of 49–25 with two conference championships and a division 1-AA national title.Mark Whipple is the quarterbacks coach for the National Football League team, the Pittsburgh Steelers
Edited sentence: He joined the team on January 24, 2004, after a highly successful collegiate career at many schools most notably the University of Massachusetts, where he posted a record of 49 - 25 with two conference championships and a division 1-AA national title.Mark Whipple is the quarterbacks coach for the professional football team, Pittsburgh Steelers