Original sentence: Born as the son of a samurai in the Satsuma domain in southern Kyūshū in what is now Kagoshima prefecture, Kuroki fought for the Shimazu clan against the Shogunal forces in the Boshin War during the Meiji Restoration.Count  (May 3, 1844 – February 3, 1923) was a soldier who served in the Imperial Japanese Army (IJA).During the Battle of Shaho, Kuroki's forces again successfully defended against the Russian offensive under General Aleksei Nikolaevich Kuropatkin from 5 October-17 and later commanded the Japanese right flank at the Battle of Mukden from 21 February-10 March 1905.He was the head of the Japanese First Army (1st Army) during the Russo-Japanese War; and his forces enjoyed a series of successes during the Manchurian fighting at the Battle of Yalu River, the Battle of Liaoyang, the Battle of Shaho and the Battle of Mukden.In 1871, Kuroki enlisted with the rank of captain in the newly established Imperial Japanese Army and, within four years, was soon promoted to lieutenant colonel.Promoted to the rank of general in November 1903, Kuroki was appointed commander of the Japanese 1st Army upon the outbreak of the Russo-Japanese War the following year
Edited sentence: Born as the son of a samurai in the Satsuma domain in southern Kyūshū in what is now Kagoshima prefecture, Kuroki fought for the Shimazu clan against the Tokugawa Shogunate forces in the Boshin War of the Meiji Restoration.Count  was a general in the Imperial Japanese Army.During the Battle of Shaho, Kuroki's forces again successfully defended against the Russian offensive under General Aleksei Nikolaevich Kuropatkin from 5 October-17 October and later commanded the Japanese right flank at the Battle of Mukden from 21 February-10 March 1905.He was the head of the Japanese First Army  during the Russo-Japanese War; and his forces enjoyed a series of successes during the Manchurian fighting at the Battle of Yalu River, the Battle of Liaoyang, the Battle of Shaho and the Battle of Mukden.In 1871, Kuroki enlisted with the rank of captain in the newly established Imperial Japanese Army and, within four years, was promoted to lieutenant colonel.Promoted to the rank of general in November 1903, Kuroki was appointed commander of the Japanese First Army upon the outbreak of the Russo-Japanese War the following year