Original sentence: Hildebrande "Tuppy" Glossop, who once challenged Bertie to swing across the pool in the Drones club and looped the rope across the last ring thereby ensuring Bertie had to jump into the pool with all his clothes
Edited sentence: Hildebrande "Tuppy" Glossop, who once challenged Bertie to swing across the pool in the Drones club and looped the rope across the last ring thereby ensuring Bertie had to jump into the pool with in "correct evening costume", or tie and tails