Original sentence: After the war Cincinnatus left the job and picked back up where he left off, working at a farm.Cincinnatus then went to the Roman assemblies popular assembly, and issued an order.He ordered everyone of military age to report to the Campus Martius by the end of the day.Tarquitius was considered to be one of the finest soldiers in Rome.The Aequi were surprised by the double attack, and were soon cut to pieces.The next morning, Cincinnatus went to the Roman forum, and nominated Lucius Tarquitius Master of the Horse (his chief deputy)
Edited sentence: After the war, Cincinnatus retired as dictator and resumed where he had left off, working on his farm.Cincinnatus then went to the Roman popular assembly and issued an order to the effect that every man of military age should report to the Campus Martius -- the Field of Mars, god of war -- by the end of the day.The Aequi were surprised by the double attack and were soon cut to pieces.The next morning, Cincinnatus went to the Roman forum, and nominated as his Master of the Horse (his chief deputy) Lucius Tarquitius, who was considered one of the finest soldiers in Rome