Original sentence: It becomes obvious to Elinor and everybody else that Mr.Surprisingly, it turned out that Mr.This makes it evident that John Willoughby is a man who only cared for his own amusement, which was why he attempted to have a relationship with Marianne, whom he treated as only an object without any consideration for her sentiments.Willoughby's affections had been long engaged with a woman named Miss Grey with fifty thousand pounds
Edited sentence: At the ball it is revealed that Mr.It becomes obvious to Elinor and everybody else involved that Mr.While it is likely that Mr.Willoughby did feel affection for Marianne while their relationship lasted, he quickly drops it when other, better prospects arise.Willoughby's affections are now engaged with a fashionable young woman named Miss Grey with fifty thousand pounds