Original sentence: At a fair in Jacksonville, Florida, Lee was discovered by a manager who sent her music to the Craig Kallman, the president of Atlantic Records, who upon hearing her demo, flew her to Nashville and offered her a record deal even though they hadn't had a Country Music division in over a decade
Edited sentence: At a fair in Jacksonville, Florida, Lee was discovered by someone who sent her music to the president of Atlantic Records, who upon hearing her demo, flew her to Nashville and offered her a record deal even though they hadn't had a Country Music division in over a decade